Lesson 15

[David Wetzel]

Dave Wetzel’s Horror Outline Version 1

What I learned doing this assignment is, if you follow the “Scary-as-Hell” model to build each horror situation and then add the non-horror scenes so story flows you can get a good idea of your current story outline, and which areas need further refinement.

DIRE FALLS

1. INT – DARK PASSAGEWAY – NIGHT

A terrified student runs along a dark passage, growls can be heard close behind. The student pulls on an old metal door, but he can’t open it.

Horror Situation: A terrified student runs along a dark passageway; he seems to be running from something close behind him.

• Anxiety: The student is anxious as he inches towards the unseen hooded figure that beckons him to come closer.

• Shock: The student’s eyes open wide in shock as an unseen figure emerges from the floating portal and growls.

• Fear: The student spins around in horror as the demon moves closer to him with its claws open and growls again.

• Panic: The student screams and sprints back up the passageway as the padded footsteps of the demon can be heard behind him!

• Hysteria: The hysterical student pulls hard at the old metal door as the demon moves closer, unseen back at the portal, the hooded figure laughs.

• Release: Then at the last second, the student pries the door open and dashes outside into the dark, snowy night just as a long black claw barely misses him!

2. EXT – SCHOOL GROUNDS – NIGHT

The student finally opens the door and evades the demon, but only for a moment.

Horror Situation: The student is torn to pieces and left on the snowy school grounds.

• Anxiety: The student is anxious as he tries to catch his breath and tries to get to his feet and run to safety.

• Shock: The student’s eyes open wide in shock as he hears a deep guttural breathing behind him.

• Fear: The student slowly turns to see the demon standing over him!

• Panic: The student screams and tries to get to his feet and run away.

• Horror: The demon grabs the student and lifts him into the air with one long, black arm with its claws out and rips him to pieces!

3. INT – SCHOOL LIBRARY – DAY

The school is buzzing with the news of the attack. There’s a rumor going around that a similar string of attacks happened at the school twenty years ago.

The gang discreetly discusses the grisly murder during study hall, the janitor, “Nearest,” overhears them.

4. INT – SCHOOL OFFICE – DAY

Jennifer and Nearest are friends and are having lunch together, Nearest tells Jennifer about the gang’s interest in the killing.

Nearest tells Jennifer that the gang is known for solving small time mysteries around school like stolen property etc.

5. INT – SCHOOL AUDITORIUM – DAY

The dean of the school and a visiting priest, Deacon Malum [David Dastmalchian], tell the students the student must have been killed by a wild animal and not to spread crazy rumors.

6. INT – SCHOOL LIBRARY – DAY

Jennifer and Nearest tell the gang not to get involved in the school investigation since it could be dangerous.

Discreetly, the gang plan to ignore the warnings and continue their own investigation.

7. EXT – SCHOOL GROUNDS – NIGHT

That night, a violent snowstorm hits the area, the bridge to school is knocked out and the whole student body is socked in on the school grounds.

8. INT – LOCKER ROOM – NIGHT

During the violent storm, a student is brutally murdered inside the locker room and the body is taken down a secret passageway.

Horror Situation: A student is killed in the locker room; the body is taken by the demon down a secret passageway to the locker room.

• Anxiety: Another student is anxious about the attack on the student from earlier. She shares her concern with another girl in the locker room with her.

• Dread: The student hears a strange guttural sound behind her, she stops and slowly turns around.

• Shock: The student’s eyes open wide in shock.

• Monster reveal: The demon appears in front of her and growls!

• Hysteria: The student screams and tries to escape from the monster.

• Suspense: The student hides inside a locker as the demon passes her.

• Release: The student slowly emerges from the locker; all seems safe now.

• Horror: The student turns around and the demon is right behind her! It impales the student with its claws and drags the body into a secret opening into the locker room.

Nearest finds the blood in the locker room and alerts the dean, Deacon Malum is on the scene too.

9. INT – SCHOOL LIBRARY – NIGHT

One of the gang overhears the conversation and tells the others, they’re sure something evil is afoot.

10. INT – DORM ROOM – NIGHT

Another student is attacked inside his dorm room by the demon which entered through a secret passageway inside the dorms.

The student’s body is dragged away from the scene of the attack and down the passageway.

Horror Situation: A student is killed in a dorm room; the body is taken by the demon down a secret passageway to the portal to hell.

• Anxiety: Another student is anxious about the attack on the student from earlier. She shares her concern with another girl in the dorm room with her.

• Dread: The student hears a strange guttural sound behind her, she stops and slowly turns around.

• Shock: The student’s eyes open wide in shock, something growls at her!

• Hysteria: The student screams and tries to escape from the monster.

• Suspense: The student hides inside a closet as the demon passes her.

• Release: The student slowly emerges from the closet; all seems safe now.

• Horror: The student turns around and the demon is right behind her! It slashes the student’s throat with its claws and drags the body into a secret opening into the locker room.

11. INT – SCHOOL AUDITORIUM – DAY

The dean and Deacon Malum assert that the student had a history of mental health issues and was a three-time run away before this disappearance.

The gang are not buying the story and want to investigate the case.

They piece together that both the students share a first name with an apostle.

12. INT – SCHOOL OFFICE – DAY

Jennifer and Nearest are sure that evil is afoot and begin to research the school’s dark history.

The attacks are similar in nature to attacks at the same school twenty years ago.

Jennifer confides in Nearest that she feels lost in life and she doesn’t know what her true path in life is supposed to be.

She tells Nearest that if she ever figures out what that is she’d buy a cool car like Nearest’s red 1969 Camero RS Coupe (nicknamed Lucille) and never look back.

Nearest tells Jennifer to put her faith in God and to “listen for the whispers,” and God will eventually show her the way.

13. INT – JENNIFER’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Jennifer tries to recover from the horrible events, the demon appears in the shape of a troubled student and is about to attack.

Nearest appears at the door and the demon resumes the form of the student and leaves.

Horror Situation: Jennifer is confronted by the demon while she’s alone in her room.

• Anguish: Jennifer tries to gather herself from the attack at the portal.

• Suspense: Suddenly, Jennifer hears a creepy, shuffling noise behind her.

• Release: Jennifer spins to reveal, CINDY (14) pint sized, long braided black hair, appealing, thin, looking troubled.

• Surprise/scare: Jennifer has her head turned as she closes the wardrobe door, when she closes the door.

• Monster reveal: When Jennifer closes the door, the horrible image of Yog-Formido appears in the mirror where Cindy was standing!

• Dread: Jennifer stops, an air of dread fills the room, the hairs on the back of her neck stand.

• Terror: Jennifer slowly turns, Cindy is standing there but now there’s an eerie red “aura” around her! Cindy lowers her eyes, they now glow red, Cindy laughs menacingly, Jennifer is terrified!

• Release: Suddenly Nearest appears at the door, Cindy laughs (as a little girl) and leaves, Jennifer rushes over to Nearest and gives him a hug.

14. INT – SCHOOL LIBRARY – NIGHT

Jennifer confides in Nearest about her synesthesia abilities and says she senses an evil red aura anything evil and around Deacon Malum.

Jennifer is embarrassed because she’s not sure of what she sees as real or a hallucination from her former days as an opioid addict.

Nearest confides in his loss of faith and that he’s familiar with addiction as a recovering alcoholic and tells her to trust her instincts.

Their research uncovers the similarities of the attacks that occurred twenty years ago.

The gang overhears Jennifer and Nearest conversation and tells them they want to help, Jennifer and Nearest are reluctant but relent.

Tom has them all gather together to take a picture and capture the moment of the addition of the two newest members of their mystery solvers club.

15. INT – SCHOOL CHAPEL – NIGHT

Jennifer is in the chapel praying; she notices the painting behind the statue of Saint Micheal of archangels fighting demons from hell.

She notices one of the demons, Yog-Formido, resembles what a student described earlier.

The dean arrives and tries to lend some comfort.

Horror Situation: The demon kills Dean Foy with its claws in front of Jennifer.

• Anxiety: Jennifer shares her feelings of anxiety over the killings and their inability to leave the school grounds.

• Dread: The As the dean is trying to lend Jennifer comfort she’s filled with dread and she sees a red “aura,” behind the dean.

• Shock: Jennifer is shocked to see the demon rise up behind the dean!

• Monster reveal: The demon is standing behind the dean!

• Horror: Jennifer is horrified as the demon impales the dean from behind with its huge claws!

• Release: The gang arrive to see the demon sprint towards a dark corner of the chapel.

Suddenly, the dean has two huge black claws impale him in his chest from behind!

Jennifer screams, the gang are nearby hear her and come running.

Jennifer and the gang see a long, tall dark demon running behind an old statue of a gargoyle in the chapel.

16. INT – DARK PASSAGEWAY – NIGHT

The gang and Jennifer follow the demon down the passageway, another student follows along.

17. INT – PORTAL TO HELL – NIGHT

Jennifer and the gang observe the demon come upon and bright yellow / orange portal to hell.

Renny tries to tackle the demon but is thrown off, the demon slashes the throat of the student that tagged along.

Tom has his stomach slashed open by the demon’s claws before it disappears with the dead student into the portal to hell.

Horror Situation: Jennifer and the gang confront the demon alone.

• Anxiety: Jennifer is anxious as she and the gang navigate the dark passageway to follow the demon.

• Dread: A sense of dread overcomes the gang as the glowing orange / yellow portal floats just around the bend with cries and screams emanating from within.

• Monster reveal: Jennifer is shocked to see the demon appear from the portal!

• Hysteria: Renny shouts and tries to tackle the demon!

• Horror: They are horrified as demon grabs a student that came down with them and rips his throat out!

• Shock: Tom is shocked as the demon takes a swing at him and slashes his stomach with its claws! The demon takes the body back into the portal with it.

• Hysteria: Jennifer is hysterical as Terry and the guys help Tom to his feet, they all scramble back up the passageway to safety.

• Release: The wound to Tom’s stomach looks bad but he says it’s not too deep.

18. INT – DARK PASSAGEWAY – NIGHT

The gang helps carry Tom back up the passageway, at the top is Deacon Malum.

Jennifer sees the red aura around the deacon and is sure he’s evil.

19. INT – SCHOOL INFERMARY – NIGHT

The gang get Tom cared for, Nearest arrives Jennifer tells him about the demon and the attack and her suspicions about Deacon Malum.

20. INT – PORTAL TO HELL – NIGHT

Deacon Malum summons the demon back and orders it kill Jennifer, Nearest and the gang.

Horror Situation: The deacon summons the demon to kill the gang and Jennifer.

• Dread: Deacon Malum stands in front of the portal and summons the demon.

• Monster reveal: The demon appears from hell.

• Dread: The deacon orders the demon to kill Jennifer and the gang.

21. INT – NEAREST’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Nearest digs out his army old service revolver from his footlocker and makes sure he has bullets.

He also sifts through other items but they’re unseen at the moment.

22. INT – GYM – DAY

Jennifer sees Marley working out on a boxing dummy with a short police baton.

Marley is frustrated that Terry won’t pay her enough attention.

Jennifer assures Marley that she’s awesome and any guy would be lucky to have her for a girlfriend.

23. INT – SCHOOL CHAPEL – NIGHT

The gang with Jennifer and Nearest regroup in the school chapel.

24. INT – PORTAL TO HELL – NIGHT

The gang confront Deacon Malum at the portal to hell, the gang try to fight the demon but he’s too strong.

Nearest shoots the demon but his bullets don’t hurt it.

One bullet ricochets off the demon and seems to kill Deacon Malum who falls into the portal to hell.

The demon follows the deacon into hell and gang all escape.

Horror Situation: Jennifer, Nearest and the gang confront the demon and Deacon Malum.

• Apprehension: Jennifer, Nearest and gang cautiously round the bend in the dark passageway to come upon the glowing yellow / orange portal to hell.

• Shock: Everyone is shocked to see Deacon Malum at the portal as he summons the demon from hell.

• Monster reveal: The terrifying demon, Yog-Formido appears from hell!

• Panic: Jennifer and Marley both scream in horror.

• Release: Nearest pulls the two behind him for protection.

• Anxiety: Jennifer reminds Nearest that they’re responsible for the gang’s safety and he comforts her.

• Panic: Renny charges ahead of Nearest and sprints at the demon!

• Hysteria: The gang all attack the demon at once but can’t seem to hurt it badly.

• Shock: Nearest shoots the demon and the bullet ricochets off the demon and hits Deacon Malum.

• Panic: The demon strikes Nearest and sends him flying ten feet.

• Hysteria: The gang all retreat back up the passageway to safety.

25. INT – SCHOOL LIBRARY – DAY

Jennifer and the gang begin to look for clues about the demon and what it wants.

They learn that the demon comes out every twenty and must kill twelve students with the same first name of the apostles to escape the school grounds.

They learn that the demon can be harmed by holy objects and a sword gifted by a saint can pierce its skin.

He tells the gang the additional research with Marley and Johnny has revealed that the demon is not alone and there are four other demons in portals to hell under other Catholic schools with a dark history

The demon can take and shape of any living human / animal but its true appearance is revealed in the reflection of a holy object.

Nearest is nearby and can hear the story but leaves Jennifer and the kids alone to bond.

26. INT – SCHOOL CHAPEL – NIGHT

Nearest is alone in the chapel and rediscovers his faith in God, the statue of Saint Michael seems to come alive and gifts Nearest with the sword of Saint Michael.

27. INT – SCHOOL CHAPEL – NIGHT

Jennifer and the gang arrive at the chapel, ready to face the demon, armed with their new knowledge and resolve.

28. INT – PORTAL TO HELL – NIGHT

Renny and the gang are all armed with various holy objects that take turns hurting the demon.

It tries to escape to hell but Nearest blocks its path, they battle and Nearest stabs the demon in the side with the sword.

As the demon is dying and falling into hell, it pulls Nearest along with it!

Nearest smiles at Jennifer and hands her the sword of Saint Micheal and she sees the aura of a bright white halo over Nearest’s head.

Nearest yells at Jennifer to look deep inside his footlocker in his room as he falls into the pits of hell.

Horror Situation: The Jennifer, Nearest and the gang confront the demon at the portal to hell for a final showdown.

• Anxiety: Jennifer, Nearest and the gang cautiously venture back down the dark passageway that leads to the glowing portal to hell.

• Surprise/scare: Suddenly, something runs across Jennifer’s feet! She squeals and jumps back in horror.

• Release: Marley points to the corner, Renny lights up the spot, it’s just a mouse.

• Monster reveal: The demon, Yog-Formido leaps from the portal ready to attack, and bares its fangs and flashes its claws.

• Shock: The gang jump back in shock at the ferocity of the demon.

• Fear: Jennifer and Marley are terrified, Marley grabs Terry by the arm.

• Release: Terry tries to ease Marley’s fear as Nearest settles the gang down and moves up to take the point.

• Panic: The demon takes a swing at Marley and barely misses her but catches Terry’s arm and cuts him badly.

• Release: Terry says he’s OK and keeps on fighting.

• Shock: Nearest charges forward and drives the sword of St. Michael into the demon’s side! The demon appears fatally wounded as the demon is staggering backwards, it grabs Nearest and impales him with its claws!

• Hysteria: Nearest is dying and tells Jennifer to get the gang to safety and gifts Jennifer the sword of St. Michael. As Nearest is falling into the portal to hell, Nearest tells Jennifer to look deep into his footlocker before he disappears!

• Panic: Jennifer and the gang flee back up the passageway to get Terry cared for.

• Release: The gang are happy to have beaten the demon but saddened at the horrible cost of Nearest’s life.

29. EXT – SCHOOL GROUNDS – DAY

The snowstorm breaks and the bridge to school is repaired, the authorities arrive, the school is safe, for now.

30. INT – SCHOOL INFERMARY – DAY

Jennifer and the gang visit Tom who is still recovering from the wounds.

Tom also tells Jennifer that the old scroll they all discovered relates that anyone who has been gifted the sword of a saint by a saint or an angel must find the other four demons and destroy them.

31. INT – SCHOOL LIBRARY – NIGHT

Jennifer and the gang talk about their adventure and examine the newly gifted sword of Saint Michael, Jennifer tells them that she’s leaving school, she has found her purpose in life.

Jennifer tells the gang that they’re all going to turn out great if they take care of each other and there’s a big group hug.

32. INT – NEAREST’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Jennifer enters Nearest’s bedroom and finds his old army footlocker.

She looks over old army memorabilia and old family photos.

Next to family photos and the new picture of Nearest with Jennifer and the gang that Tom took earlier.

Jennifer smiles and pockets the picture and continues to look in the footlocker.

Jennifer discovers and false bottom in the locker and pulls out the bottom to reveal a cache of hundreds of thousands of dollars wrapped in neatly packed bundles.

There’s a note on top of the money from Nearest, he tells her he thinks that she’s found her purpose in life now and to go hunt down those four other demons and finish God’s work.

Nearest goes on to tell Jennifer to take good care of Lucille and that she gets a little skittish at anything over 120 mph.

Jennifer empties the envelope and the keys to Lucille and his dog tags fall into her palm. Jennifer smiles and pockets them both.

33. INT – SCHOOL SHOP CLASS – DAY

Terry, Johnny and Marley look over Renny’s handiwork on a storage case for the sword of St. Michael.

They marvel at the shiny new gun metal grey case and hi five Renny.

34. INT – SCHOOL CHAPEL – NIGHT

Jennifer sits alone and prays for the strength to complete her noble quest.

The camera pulls back to reveal the gang just behind her, giving her space to be alone.

Soon they all hug and promise to stay in touch with each other.

Marley gifts Jennifer with a newly fashioned sturdy but ornately designed grey metal storage case made by Renny to store and take care of the sword of Saint Michael.

The image of Saint Michael fighting demons is embossed on the cover of the case.

They all wander back over to the painting behind the statue of Saint Michael.

They’re all astonished to see what appears to be Nearest in the painting, battling Yog-Formido in the pits of hell alongside other heavenly archangels.

35. EXT – TRAIN CROSSING – DAY

Jennifer sits in silence in Lucille at a red traffic signal, waiting for the train to pass.

Her signal blinkers are flashing to her intention to turn right.

She glances over at the grey metal storage case in the passenger seat and lovingly pats it.

As the train flies by, it’s travelling right to left, Jennifer spots a familiar face riding onboard.

Time seems to slow to a crawl for a moment.

A red aura surrounds Deacon Malum [David Dastmalchian], their eyes meet.

Deacon Malum has a devilish grin as he gazes at Jennifer and slowly pulls the shade down.

When the train passes, the gates go up, and the signal turns green.

Jennifer smiles to herself, then pats the grey metal case again as she changes her turn signal to left.

Jennifer pulls back onto the road and turns the car left in the direction the train is rolling, then she revs the engine on the bright red hot rod for a moment.

Lucille sounds like a ferocious beast that’s ready to be unleashed.

Jennifer pulls out Nearest’s dog tags the crucifix that she now wears around her neck and kisses both keepsakes before tucking them back under her shirt.

Jennifer brings up her Spotify and dials up “Lucille” by Little Richard.

Jennifer cranks the volume up to ten and punches the gas, Lucille roars to life and fish tails down the road towards the speeding train, on a mission from God.

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[Timothy Barley]

Tim's Horror Outline Version 1 (very first version, btw)

What I learned from doing this assignment is that I already want to change up the outline to a weekend and not just one night.

1. INT. VIVIAN’S STUDIO – NIGHT
Essence: Vivian’s reflection reaches through the mirror and drags her in, leaving her doppelgänger to replace her, hinting at the curse of Vanity and our monster, Vivian.
• Horror Situation: Vivian is replaced by her reflection, symbolizing vanity and horror.
• Emotions: Apprehension (Vivian examining herself), Shock (reflection reaches out), Anguish (Vivian’s entrapment).
• Scares: Reflection acts independently, causing an unexpected grab.
• Release: Moment of calm as she breaks free for a second before her final pull through.
• Monster Reveal: Vivian’s ageless doppelgänger steps out, shatters the mirror into pieces, each with a piece of the original screaming for help.

2. EXT. SECLUDED BEACH HOUSE – DAY
Essence: The influencers arrive, jealousies between influencers and culture behavior heightened and excited but sensing the house’s isolated and ominous atmosphere.

3. INT. BEACH HOUSE FOYER – DAY
Essence: Vivian greets the group and explains what the house has to offer with a cryptic toast to “transformation.” Tyler is wary of her.

4. INT. BEACH HOUSE – VARIOUS ROOMS – NIGHT
Essence: Conrad, the cryptic property manager, warns them of a forecasted Nor’easter and mentions Vivian’s strange history. Tyler listens closely, intrigued.

5. INT. BEACH HOUSE – NIGHT
Essence: As the storm cuts off communication, and the power flickers from the generator, various members of the group notice subtle oddities in the mirrors, but they laugh it off as nerves.
• Horror situation: The storm rolls in, cuts off cell service and flickering the power
• Emotions: Apprehension (are the reflections real), anxiety (the dark and storm)
• Scares: ghoulish reflections on reflective surfaces
• Release: lights come back on, everyone relaxes

6. INT. BROOKE’S ROOM – NIGHT
Essence: Brooke is grabbed by her reflection and pulled into the mirror, leaving bloody streaks. Her doppelgänger emerges, smiling coldly.
• Horror Situation: Brooke’s reflection becomes aggressive and violent.
• Emotions: Fear (noticing reflection moving independently), Dread (realizing the danger), Shock (being pulled through).
• Scares: Sudden movement of the reflection, sinister smile.
• Release: Silence as her reflection observes her.
• Monster Reveal: Brooke’s doppelgänger steps out, replacing her.

7. INT. LIVING ROOM – NIGHT
Essence: The group searches for Brooke, assuming she’s playing a prank. Tyler notices the blood on the mirror but says nothing, creating tension with Jonah. Brooke shows up later.

8. EXT. POOL AREA – NIGHT
Essence: Jonah’s reflection reaches up through the water and drowns him. His dry doppelgänger emerges, indifferent.
• Horror Situation: Jonah’s reflection drags him under the water.
• Emotions: Suspense (footsteps approaching), Panic (water distorting his face), Horror (reflection holding him down).
• Scares: Reflection moves indpendently in the water.
• Release: Pool quiets after the attack.
• Monster Reveal: Jonah’s dry doppelgänger walks back into the house.

9. INT. DINING ROOM – NIGHT
Essence: The group realizes something is wrong with Jonah and Brooke. Tyler shares his theories about Vivian, but only Lily takes him seriously.

10. INT. SOPHIA’S ROOM – NIGHT
Essence: Sophia’s doppelgänger pulls her through the mirror, twisting her body painfully.
• Horror Situation: Sophia’s reflection distorts to lure her in, embodying her vanity.
• Emotions: Surprise (seeing an idealized version of herself), Panic (being grabbed), Shock (bones snapping).
• Scares: Reflection beckons her.
• Release: A brief moment of calm as she reaches out.
• Monster Reveal: Sophia’s perfect doppelgänger replaces her.

11. INT. BATHROOM – NIGHT
Essence: Cassidy leans into a cracked mirror, and the glass shatters outward, slicing her. Her reflection watches with a cold smile.
• Horror Situation: Cassidy’s reflection embodies her fear of imperfection.
• Emotions: Apprehension (examining herself closely), Panic (mirror shattering), Horror (reflection’s cold stare).
• Scares: Sudden shattering of glass.
• Release: Moment of silence before the doppelgänger emerges.
• Monster Reveal: Cassidy’s flawless doppelgänger steps forward.

12. INT. HALLWAY – NIGHT
Essence: Riley hears Brooke’s voice calling for help. He reaches into a mirror and is crushed by his reflection, which twists his body as it replaces him.
• Horror Situation: Riley’s own reflection becomes his trap.
• Emotions: Suspense (hearing Brooke’s voice), Dread (seeing reflection change), Horror (being crushed by his reflection).
• Scares: Voice calling for help.
• Release: Brief silence before he reaches out.
• Monster Reveal: Riley’s doppelgänger steps out, twisting unnaturally.

13. INT. DARKROOM – NIGHT
Essence: Zara hides in the darkroom, but her reflection slowly crushes her head against a window as she struggles.
• Horror Situation: Zara’s reflection embodies her fear of reality.
• Emotions: Panic (noticing movement), Dread (reflection appears), Horror (reflection crushes her head).
• Scares: Reflection seen in window.
• Release: Silence before it acts.
• Monster Reveal: Zara’s doppelgänger emerges, adjusting her hair.

14. INT. BASEMENT – NIGHT
Essence: Mason frantically tries to destroy the mirrors, but a shard impales him. His doppelgänger steps out, copying his dying expression, finishes the job coldly, then tosses his body through the mirror.
• Horror Situation: Mason’s reflection mirrors his desperation.
• Emotions: Suspense (mirror cracks), Dread (reflection’s face), Horror (impaled by shard).
• Scares: Shards falling around him.
• Release: Moment of belief he’s wining just before impact of shard.
• Monster Reveal: Mason’s doppelgänger exits, mirroring his expression.

15. INT. STUDY – NIGHT
Essence: Tyler and Lily discover old photos, historical information. ,etc. on Vivian, now realizing that they need to destroy the house to confine her.

16. EXT. BEACH HOUSE – DAWN
Essence: Tyler and Lily find gasoline for the generator and spread it around the house to destroy it, hoping to burn down the house.

17. INT. BEACH HOUSE FOYER – DAWN
Essence: Tyler and Lily catch sight of their reflections in a window, grinning back menacingly. Vivian’s doppelgänger appears, taunting them before fading away, suggesting the curse’s persistence.
• Horror Situation: Their own reflections haunt them as they attempt to destroy the house.
• Emotions: Suspense (seeing reflections watching), Dread (Vivian’s doppelgänger), Anguish (realizing the curse persists).
• Scares: Reflections suddenly appear.
• Release: Silence as reflections fade.
• Monster Reveal: Vivian’s doppelgänger smiles cryptically.

18. EXT. POOLSIDE CABANA – DAWN
Essence: Tyler and Lily watch the house burn, glimpsing distorted reflections in the pool. They walk away, leaving the reflections behind, uncertain if they’ve truly escaped.

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[Dean Burkey]

LESSON 15 HOMEWORK:
Dean’s Horror Outline Version 1
What I learned doing this assignment is how to organize the scares for maximum impact.
MYST
EXT. SEASIDE TOWN – SUNRISE
Apprehension, Fear, Dread: A MYSTerious MYST moves through a seaside town teeming with new red antennas all around. Tortured screams abound. MYSTerious screams in the MYSTerious MYST.
EXT. CITY HALL – DAY
Apprehension: The aftermath of a horrific event. The Myst leaves silently. Five women lie dead, each with a bullet in her forehead. No one else can be found in this once thriving town.
INT. GOVERNOR’S OFFICE – DAY
Apprehension, Suspense: When informed, the Governor orders that that tragedy be kept out of the news. Wealthy elite Mr. Hargrove agrees to keep everything quiet. A.k.a. The real horror: Government Coverup & Greed: A Lethal Combination.
EXT. PARK / TOWN SQUARE – DAY
Release: Villagers enjoy a casual community picnic. Smoke rises from grills. People stand in line to be served. Children run around playing tag, laughter fills the air.
Surprise, Apprehension, Anxiety, Suspense: VROOM! The thunder of engines breaks the calm serenity as a convoy of Hargrove Communications trucks pull into the square. The workers jump out of those trucks and begin unloading bright red antennas, catching the attention of some villagers.
Apprehension/Anxiety: The villagers exchange glances, murmuring questions about what’s going on. Dr. Evelyn Hart notices the anxious looks among the townspeople. She walks over to speak to one of the workers, but he just gives her a vague smile and says they’re bringing better entertainment for everyone.
Apprehension, Unease: Some of the older villagers, including Marcus, look uneasy. They voice their concerns to Daniel, the schoolteacher, about how fast everything seems to be changing. A feeling of unease overwhelms them as the workers start installing the antennas on rooftops.
Surprise: The team works quickly, almost too quickly. Startling to see. Announces activation will take effect that evening.
Unease: The antennas clash with the Springbok atmosphere of this gentile town.
Shock: A worker makes a mistake and gets zapped by whatever strange power comes from those antennas. He screams, flies off the roof, and lands dead in the street.
Shock and Fear: The zapped worker’s body gets covered with a tarp. But the tarp flattens, indicating that nothing is underneath. When the trucks storm away, that tarp blows away, revealing that the zapped worker’s body is gone. Gone for good.
INT. VARIOUS HOUSES – NIGHT
Release: Various individuals and families enjoy a greater variety of entertainment choices on their TV. But even in the houses with families, the people watch individually on their own separate TVs.
EXT. ELDERGROVE – SUNSET
Suspense: Six weeks after becoming beta-testers, less and less people attend the community events, giving the outside a ghost town feel, even before all the “fun” begins.
Surprise: That night the “fun” begins. That same mysterious Myst from the opening scenes visits. Some citizens disappear.
Release: Rationale and denial reign supreme. The others assume they left town for personal reasons.
Suspense: More people disappear in the Myst. – Disappear permanently!
Shock: Sarah runs from the Myst, but gets cornered and can’t run anymore.
After Sarah disappears, people begin to consider the real dangers of the Myst and become more aware of the Myst making people disappear.
EXT. ELDERGROVE – NIGHT
Release: George uses an electric leaf-blower to stave off the Myst. A plan that seems to work.
Fear: But then the power goes out; and the Myst engulfs him. Bye-bye George.
Release: David uses a gas-powered leaf-blower. Another plan that seems to work.
Fear: But the leaf-blower bursts into flames. Another MYSTerious death.
Suspense, Anguish: Was that just a coincidence? Or is this Myst more powerful than we first imagined?
INT. HOUSE – NIGHT
Anguish: The others stay locked inside. The Myst defends itself in order to accomplish its goal: The annihilation of everyone in town.
EXT. DR HART’S OFFICE – NIGHT
Apprehension: Dr Hart hears the screams of those outside.
Surprise: Sudden pounding at the door.
Release: It’s just Marcus visiting Dr Hart because she asked for his help.
Suspense: They venture forth into the level-one Myst together. Pervasive Thin Myst (Base Layer): A thin, almost translucent Myst that covers the entire town of Eldergrove. It serves as a psychological reminder that danger is always present. It creates an eerie atmosphere, muffling sounds and reducing visibility slightly, and serves as a constant source of unease.
Surprise: A car – with a family inside hoping to escape – almost hits Dr Hart, but Marcus pulls her safely out of the way.
Shock: That car tries to leave town and gets thrown back by the level-two Myst surrounding the town, but no one is inside the car anymore. Medium Myst (Perimeter Layer): A swirling, medium-density Myst forms a barrier around the entire village, preventing anyone from leaving. This Myst is dense enough to obscure vision and serves as a physical and psychological prison, making it clear that escape is impossible.
Fear: They see level-three Myst attacking someone else who was stupid enough to be out in the Myst like they are. Thick Roaming Myst (Hunter Layer): A dense, roaming Myst moves unpredictably throughout the town, actively hunting individuals who are emotionally vulnerable. This thick Myst can form shadowy figures and whispers, playing on the fears of its victims and engulfing those who succumb to despair. The presence of these three layers – each with its own function – creates an environment of total isolation, helplessness, and inevitable doom.
Suspense: The level-three Myst Shadow Stalker turns their way, so they flee.
Release: They figure they can reach the village hall in time.
Suspense: Dr Hart has too many keys and is taking too long finding the right one.
Anguish: Marcus hears his wife’s voice in the level-three Myst, calls out her name, and willingly walks toward the level-three Myst.
Release: Dr Hart grabs Marcus and pulls him back, causing both of them to fall inside the village hall where she quickly gets up to lock the door. They share a Hallmark movie style deep gaze into each other’s eyes.
Surprise: Screams from outside kill the Hallmark movie vibe.
Suspense: Dr. Evelyn Hart deduces that a program package that promised to connect everyone with the world really separated everyone from each other, so the Myst feeds on despair and isolation. She calls everyone to join them in the village hall.
Monster Reveal: She figures out that the Myst has something to do with the beta-test program for Hargrove Communications. The individualized programming separated people, making them more vulnerable and more “attractive” to the Myst.
Monster Reveal: The Myst thrives on isolated and lonely people.
Suspense: Anna tries to connect with Daniel, urging him to stay strong to fight the Myst. Daniel, burdened by guilt and despair, begins to break down.
Release: Daniel agrees to help however he can. The group manages to find a glimmer of hope by holding hands and sharing their fears, seemingly weakening the Myst temporarily.
Monster Reveal: Dr. Evelyn Hart pleads for everyone to stay together and to work together to destroy the signal from the red antennas.
Daniel and Frank start knocking down the red antennas.
Release: It’s working! The Myst grows weaker with each newly destroyed red antenna.
Shock, Anguish: But before they can destroy the third antenna, the Myst comes at Daniel and Frank full force, Daniel jumps off the roof, but Frank’s too afraid to jump and becomes engulfed by the Myst.
Horror Situation: Frank gets taken by the Myst.
Reaction: Dr. Hart, Marcus, Daniel, Anna, her son Caleb, Claire, and Tom clutch each other inside a the town hall.
INT. VILLAGE HALL – NIGHT
Suspense: The survivors sit in a circle inside the village hall, the only light coming from a flickering oil lamp in the center. They gather together, trying to keep their spirits up, hoping that if they stay awake and together, the Myst won’t take them.
Release: Daniel tells a story to lighten the mood.
Surprise: A loud BANG hits one of the boarded windows. Everyone jumps, their eyes wide in fear as they exchange worried glances.
Suspense: They all sit in silence, listening, as the sound of scraping slowly follows the bang. The noise seems to move around the outside of the hall, circling them like a predator stalking its prey.
Release: False hope. Marcus says it’s probably just an animal… or the wind. Daniel nods in agreement, trying to steady his own racing heart. Dr. Hart tells a story.
Surprise, Shock: Claire shrieks and her eyes widen. Sayonara serenity! She sees it – a shadow flickering across one of the windows. It moves slowly, deliberately, pausing just long enough for her to realize it isn’t her imagination.
Suspense: The shadow seems to linger, watching them, before it slinks away, disappearing into the night. Claire looks around, but no one else notices it. Her heart pounds as she tries to convince herself it was nothing. Clearly, she’s still stuck in the denial stage with naivety and delusion as her only sources of comfort.
Surprise: A slow, deliberate, almost polite knock echos through the hall. The survivors freeze, their faces drain of color. The knock comes once more, followed by silence that seems to stretch endlessly.
Suspense: Tom, sitting nearest to the door, takes a deep breath. He stands, his face conflicted. He moves toward the door, despite Dr. Hart warning him not to. He ignores her. As he approaches the door, a faint, melodic voice drifts in from the other side pleading please. Tom opens the door.
Release: For a moment, nothing moves.
Shock: A figure emerges from the fog – a Shadow Stalker. Its face twisted into a grotesque, almost pleased smile. Tom’s eyes widen in horror, but before he can react, the creature lunges forward, grabbing him effortlessly. Tom lets out a terrified scream as the Shadow Stalker yanks him into the Myst. The door slams shut behind them. Followed by a heinously whispered thank you.
Fear: The reality settles over them – the Myst isn’t just a force of nature; it’s intelligent, malevolent, and it’s toying with them, one by one.
Dread: Eerie whispers taunt Claire, revealing her fears and secrets to all. She cries out in protest, but to no avail.
Shock: Claire screams that she can’t take it anymore, so she rushes to open the door.
Anguish, Dread: The others watch as Marcus rushes over to save her, only to be taken along with her.
Release: Dr Hart slams the door shut and locks it again. A brief respite of silence.
Dread: A sinister cackle resounds in the eerie, haunting Myst.
INT. CITY HALL – DAY
Fear: Dr. Hart, Anna, her son Caleb, and Daniel clutch each other inside the village hall.
Panic: Eldergrove Population: Four. The Myst seeps full force through cracks and under the doors to envelope them. Dr. Hart tells them to stay strong and keep their eyes closed.
Horror: Anna’s son becomes curious and peeks. Whoosh! The Myst takes him away. Afraid Anna will open her eyes, Daniel opens his, so he can see to cover Anna’s eyes with his hands, pleading for her to keep them closed. Whoosh! Daniel disappears in the Myst.
Hysteria: Dr. Hart and Anna clutch each other with their eyes clenched closed, tears streaming down their faces. The Myst Shadow Stalker swirls around them in a horrendous fury. The fury grows in intensity. Swirling and twirling. Say horrible things, especially to Anna for losing her son Caleb. Dr Hart and Anna hang onto each other, clutching and weeping.
Release: Whoosh! The Myst recedes, leaving Dr. Hart and Anna all alone. Eldergrove Population: Two.
EXT. CITY HALL – DAY
Release: Finally opening their eyes, they see that the Myst receded, Dr. Hart and Anna run outside, sad everyone else died, but happy that they survived. They smile and hug and jump for joy.
Shock: Kablam! Kablam! Bullets fired from a sniper hit them each in their forehead. Eldergrove Population: Zero.
EXT. BASE CAMP – DAY
Suspense: The sniper is Scientist 1. He and his partner comment on how well the Myst has improved, leaving only two. Scientist 1 calls Hargrove to inform him that the town has been “evacuated”.
EXT. ELDERGROVE – SUNSET
Suspense: The scientists quickly remove and dispose of Dr. Hart and Claire’s bodies. A government team arrives to investigate the disappearance of everyone, along with Mr. Hargrove, who quickly buys the village under the guise of helping, hinting at further sinister plans. Hargrove agrees to keep everything quiet, so he won’t ruin the governor’s chances of re-election. He also agrees to have his top scientists figure what could be causing such a MYSTerious phenomena.
EXT. SEASIDE TOWN – DAY
Suspense: The Myst rolls into a new, isolated town, teeming with new red antennas.
EXT. BASE CAMP – DAY
Suspense: Two scientists oversee the operation from a distance, hinting that Mr. Hargrove has a bigger plan; and the cycle is far from over. So the Myst isn’t so MYSTerious after all, for as long as there is greed and despair, the Myst will be there. They say that after this next town, they’ll experiment with larger towns and even cities.
Shock: A sudden look to the camera as he says to the viewer: Maybe yours. The Myst’s sinister cackle resounds.

[Diane Keranen]

Diane’s Horror Outline Version 1

What I learned doing this assignment is that my horror story is almost complete! I’ve got non-horror parts to fill in, but overall, I learned the skills and techniques to finish the script and ramp up the level of horror at appropriate levels. Awesome course.

1. INT. UNDERGROUND CAVERN — (FLASHBACK – 1963) — OPENING SCENE

INT. UNDERGROUND CAVERN — UNLIT
Shaky lantern light and shadows reveal a tunnel leading to the cavern. Men run and yell to “go faster” as the light grows brighter. Four men are a blasted out of the tunnel by a fierce torrent of water. The four men, killed by the force of the water, lay still as the water and cavern go silent. The last lit lantern goes out.
Horror Situation: The water appears to be deliberately killing the men.
• Panic: The men are desperate to escape from the water.
• Horror: The men are all killed.
• Monster Reveal: The water is self-animated and murderous.
• Release: The calm of the cavern after the deaths.
END FLASHBACK

2. EXT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — PATHWAY — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The group greets each other as they arrive on Alcatraz Island. They listen to instructions about the tours, then fall behind the main tour group to follow their alternate, self-guided, tour.

3. EXT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — ROCKY PATH — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The group finds the rumored cave and debate among them whether or not to go in.

4. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — CAVE — DAY — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
After entering the cave, the group finds the stone door deep inside the cave.

5. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND HALLWAY — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The group enters and explores the hallway and the cells along the hallway.
Horror Situation: They are about to realize they are trapped.
• Monster Reveal: The water closes the door and hides it.

6. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND HALLWAY — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The group finds they are trapped.
Horror Situation: After exploring the underground hallway, the group can’t find the door to get out the way they came in.
• Confusion: The door should be there. It’s a straight hallway.
• Anxiety: We can’t get out if we can’t find the door.
• Suspense: They might be lost for a long time. No one knows they are here.
• Release: They form a plan to seek an alternate way out.

7. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND HALLWAY — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
Water floods through the hallway.
Horror Situation: Water starts filling the hallway becoming waist deep and swirling.
• Fear: The fast-rising water comes from unknown origin and they can’t escape it.
• Release: The water goes away and they are fine, but…
• Anxiety: …one of them is missing,
• Confusion: Uncertainty about if someone is missing
• Release: Talk themselves into being mistaken (other than Travis).
• Monster Reveal: The water takes one of them.
• Suspense: Only one of them is sure someone is missing, the other deny it.

8. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CATACOMBS — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
After the water drains from the hallway, the group finds the passage to the catacombs and decide to look for a way out. If the water got out, so can they.

9. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CATACOMBS — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The group goes into the catacombs looking for escape.

10. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CATACOMBS — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The water comes again.
Horror Situation: Water begins to run through the catacombs and rapidly gets deeper and faster. Another of the group is missing when the water goes away.
• Surprise: The all know Frankie is missing after the water leaves.
• Confusion: They don’t know what is going on with the water coming and going so quickly.
• Denial: Frankie could be pranking them by faking his disappearance.
• Apprehension: If he’s not pranking them, two of the group could now be missing.

11. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CATACOMBS — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The group continues through the catacombs looking for a way out.

12. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CATACOMBS — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS

The group experiences a sudden scare.
Horror Situation: The level of fear is revealed to the group.
• Scare: The last in line suddenly screams out and their flashlight hits the ground and goes out.
• Suspense: Another of them could be gone.
• Release: Isabel tripped. Yells to the others that she’s okay.
• Scare: Someone at the front of the line screams.
• Suspense: Travis nearly vomits.
• Shock: Travis shines his flashlight on a severed hand.

13. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CATACOMBS — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
Having found the severed hand, the group changes course to go back and try to find the door again.

14. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CATACOMBS — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The group rushes back to return to the hallway where they first got lost but are blocked by the water that attacks them.
Horror Situation: The water is not behaving like water. It swirls and rises up oddly.
• Shock: They stop retreating and watch the water as it comes closer to them
• Suspense: Chester doesn’t believe the water is acting weird, that it’s just the flashlight lighting that makes it look so odd.
• Surprise: Chester goes into the water and becomes entrapped.
• Anguish: The group watches as the water actually grabs Chester and pulls him through the passage. Chester screams that the water is holding him. The water suddenly rushes toward the group, they try to get out of the way by stepping aside and the grab at Chester who screams and is unable to reach out to them. The water then reaches up in the shape of a hand covers his mouth. When they grab for him, the water drags him under. The group watches as wide-eyed Chester is dragged down into the catacombs.
• Suspense: Going back was no longer an option, they look at each other then turn to go deeper into the catacombs.

15. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CATACOMBS — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
They can’t go back so they continue deeper into the catacombs. They express regrets for coming into the caves and hopes that they can get out.

16. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CATACOMBS — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
Bonnie and Vincent, lover interests, stay close together as the group goes down another level into the catacombs.
Horror Situation: The space is tighter, colder, wetter.
• Dread: Even though the water is after them and they are going deeper under the island, they have no choice but to continue.

17. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — DEEP CAVES — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
This level is more rustic. The ground is more uneven, the wall more course, the ceiling lower, and everything is growing more damp.
Horror Situation: Vincent falls into a puddle and he and Bonnie shout out, the water comes again.
• Anguish: The puddle water swirls up and grabs Vincent.
• Fear: A loud screech blasts through the passage that seems to come from everywhere.
• Panic: Bonnie tries to pull Vincent out of the water, Harold tries to help, the others are looking around for where the screech is coming from.
• Horror: A wall of water approaches from behind them. It has arms reaching out and legs pulling it toward the trapped man. Vincent is taken by the water in front of the others.

18. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — DEEP CAVES— UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
After Vincent’s death. The group grapples with what to do next. The succumb to anxiety and decide to hurry as fast as they can to the end of the catacombs in hope there’s a way out.

19. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CATACOMBS — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The remaining five members are hurrying, quietly as they can, through the increasingly rustic catacombs. They come out into a large, rocky cavern. In the cavern is a pool of water.

20. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CAVERN — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The remaining members of the group arrive at the cavern with the pond. They are wet, tattered, cold, and banged up. They look around. Trapped again.
Horror Situation: Remaining members of the group reach the dead-end cavern with the pond where they find skeletons, long-dead bodies, and the corpses of the other group member that were taken by the water.
• Surprise: They reach what appears to be the end of the catacombs.
• Release: At least it’s quiet here and they seem safe for now.
• Apprehension: They wonder what this means. Do they need to go back?
• Fear: The find the many dead bodies from different times (very old pirate remains, the Alcatraz prison escapee bones in prison garb, newer dead bodies of probable adventurers like themselves, and the dead bodies of the missing members of their group.
• Anguish: They believe there is no way out and they will die here.
• Panic: When one sees a possible way out, he throws caution to the wind and tries to escape.
• Horror: The one who panicked and tried to escape, is killed and ripped apart in front of the others with blood and body parts being strewn around them and the cavern.

21. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CAVERN — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
Ghoulie notices there’s a light area under the pond and whispers to let the others know. They turn off their lights and look.

22. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CAVERN — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
Suddenly, Ghoulie goes gets overly excited into a state of panic and hysteria. He screams that he’s going to swim for it.

Horror Situation: Ghoulie panics and jumps in the water to swim to get out from under the island.
• Panic: Ghoulie shouts that there’s a way out.
• Scare: The others yell for him to be quiet.
• Horror: The water screeches and swirls up. The all hide except for Ghoulie. The water blasts him against the ceiling of the cavern. When the water calms, Ghoulie’s body is torn and tattered with bones visible. His lifeless remains rest on the floor of the cavern.
• Hysteria & Anguish: Bonnie sobs silently. Harold sits on a large rock and holds his arms up around his head in anguish.
• Release: Isabel suggests they get weapons from the pile of bodies.

23. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CAVERN — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
Isabel collects bones and a skull.

24. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CAVERN — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
They wait but not for long.
Horror Situation: Travis taunts the water by yelling. It obliges and comes for them again.
• Horror: The water grabs Travis as the other fight the water with their weapons. But the water drags Travis down into the pool. They see him dragged down with arms reaching for help.
• Hysteria: Harold and Bonnie fight the water with all they have. Screaming and yelling.
• Anguish: They can’t find Isabel.

25. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CAVERN — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
Isabel is fighting the water differently. She’s chanting something over an arrangement of bones that look like the Jolly Roger flag design. She’s repeating a chant to chase away the cursed water.

26. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CAVERN — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The water lets out one final terrifying screech before retreating back into the pool.

27. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CAVERN — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
The water is done with them but they are still trapped. Isabel stands and looks at Bonnie and Harold. Harold, exhausted, still holds his weapons. Bonnie cries and collapses down to sit on a boulder at the edge of the pool.
• Scare: The water ripples.
• Dread: Isabel, Bonnie, and Harold all prepare to fight it again.
• Release: Travis pops up out of the water.

25. INT. ALCATRAZ ISLAND — UNDERGROUND CAVERN — UNLIT/FLASHLIGHTS
Travis tells them that the tunnel does indeed lead out to the Bay. He saw the dark water pass by him and head for the deep. It’s over. They can leave.