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Lesson 16
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SUBJECT: Mark Napier’s Has Completed Act 2 Draft 1
What I learned from this assignment: I have to pick up the pace as I thought I had to write the dialog versus the skeleton of the ACT.
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ACT 2:
BEAT SHEET REACTION TO THE TURNING POINT SCENE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Security-Investigator’s Office), Langley, Virginia–Day
–Mark briefs Headquarters security investigator on case in question.
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Military Affairs, Branch Chief office), Langley, Virginia–Day
–Mark accepts a new mission assignment in Afghanistan.
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
–DCOS tries to pressure the OMA Office Director to have Mark fired.
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
–DCOS fabricates a ruse to have Mark charged with a felony and be prosecuted.
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (COS’ Office), Kabul, Afghanistan–Day
–Mark arrives in Afghanistan to be briefed by COS “The Spider” to be Deputy Chief of Base
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ACT 2:
REACTION TO THE TURNING POINT SCENE OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Security-Investigator’s Office), Langley, Virginia–Day
BEGINNING: Mark briefs Headquarters security investigator on case in question. He also expresses concern for the employee who is wrongfully accused and outlined the negative atmosphere toward him.
MIDDLE: He reveals his insightful discussion with Station’s Chief of Communications and the precaution he took to ensure his report was not altered.
END: Mark expresses concern and anticipation of being retaliated against in hopes Office of Security will not give credence to false allegations.
ACT 2:
REACTION TO THE TURNING POINT SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Security-Investigator’s Office), Langley, Virginia–Day
DESCRIPTION: After Mark lands at the Washington-Dulles International Airport and disembarks to report to his home office in the New Headquarters Building, he is informed that he has a message from the investigator in charge of the case and needs him to report to her office in Old Headquarters Building. Mark knocks on her office door and introduces himself.
Mark: “Hi….Mark here from OMA. I just got in from Iraq Station. ….I understand you left a message inviting me for a ‘fireside chat’ ? ….. I suppose it’s related to the Iraq Station fiasco that got the wrong guy deported?”
Investigator: “Oh hi!… Yes..Yes… Please come in and have a seat.” The investigator is dressed in a black suit and skirt with white blouse.
Investigator: “I’ve read the detailed cable report which pretty much captured the essence of what took place. …. I know you used to work for the Office of Security as a Security Protective Officer years back, so you wrote it like a police report.” She jovially laughs, as well as Mark.
Mark: “Yes…force of habit I suppose.”
“Is there anything else beyond the report that you’d like to add?”
Mark: “First and foremost, I think Gary was horribly treated in this matter and was raped of his dignity. … I know he requested to see a psychiatrist in Jordan, but I did all I could to set the record straight for him after my office confirmed his report.”
….“Second, prior to this incident I was being subjected to a hostile work environment that was compounded by three events. ….”
….”The DCI’s representative visited Station and four military command elements that the CIA has embedded 2 man cell teams with and the feedback he got was not flattering for Station. The DCOS, Reilly, blamed my teams…. “
…”Then Station’s Internment Facility Coordinator Officer…Pedro, he worked near me got pissed to find out I made more money than him and became aggressive after that…I don’t quite understand why since I only worked for the CIA 16 years before becoming an Independent Contractor versus his 3 years??? …He asked how much I made and I was honest with him is all.”…..
…”Incidentally, he apparently creates hostile work environments for women as well. …I have seen him personally go after a woman and make her cry and another analyst he called her analysis stupid… forgetting he cc:’d her on the return message to a slough of folks.”
…”That triggered nasty notes back and forth like 10 times before the DCOS finally sent out a message in big bold red letters: ‘CEASE FIRE…CEASE FIRE…CEASE FIRE.’ “
….”Before Pedro became abrasive towards me he admitted sheepishly towards me that his home office of the Crimes and Narcotics Center told him: ‘You need to get out of our face for two years.’ …So, don’t take my word, ask CNC.“
…”Bottom line is I got tired of the negative atmospherics and being isolated from important staff meetings and Pedro feeding into it …..plus covering for OMA for sending folks out with no training, let alone no CIA experience. …That’s why I was working long hours because I am having to mentor and guide them like children.”
Investigator: “Well thank you for that insight…and it was admirable that you stepped up to the plate at great risk to yourself and career here at CIA.”
Mark: “Well …. As noted in the report, I was told that the guy who downloaded the child pornography apparently had a history of this before. … I obtained that insight while talking to Station’s Chief of Communications who knew the guy for 20 years.” ……
….“I never said a word about what unfolded, but he made the astute observation that he never saw Joe behave in such a manner, since the last time he downloaded child pornography.“
…”He stopped in mid sentence and it hit him like a brick in the face, before he figured out on his own what was going on.” ….
DESCRIPTION: The investigator remained silent allowing Mark to talk uninterrupted, but was clearly absorbing it all in.
Mark:…“I suppose you’ve been tracking communications between Joe and whoever he’s talking to for your investigation?”
Investigator: “Oh yes.”
Mark: “You no doubt realize that I anticipate being retaliated against by Iraq Station? …I have had to endure a good deal of hostilities from Station as is.”
DESCRIPTION: The investigator’s posture stiffened as she motioned her head in complete concurrence without a word. She knew it was the cultural norms of CIA executives to wield their positions as a weapon of mass destruction and the Directorate of Operation was no exception.
Mark: “Anything else? ….Oh by the way! … I do not know if Station will try to alter my cable, but I placed a copy of it in my notes system and sent it to myself as an electronic backup. I do not trust Station leadership and particularly I do not trust the DCOS…..Also one other thing.” ….
…..”In addition, to being new to the IC (Independent Contractor) world I was working longer hours as I said….well I had to call together the Station’s Chief of Finance, Chief of Human Resources and the COS’ secretary who has final approval before the finance cables go out to review and approve my pay voucher, so I hope they don’t sit on it.”
Investigator: “OK…Great! … Thank you for stopping by. I know you must be exhausted from the long trip.”
DESCRIPTION: Mark departs her office and heads to the Agency cafeteria to ‘grease his belly’ before returning to the office for his follow on assignment.
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ACT 2:
SCENE OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Military Affairs, Branch Chief office), Langley, Virginia–Day
BEGINNING: Mark learns that DCOS Reilly is raising Hell with OMA, but Mark discusses with his branch chief that the whole ordeal could have been avoided, if Station had not had a knee jerk reaction to the incident.
MIDDLE: Mark also addresses the problem between COS and military commanders on the ground and how the entire affair is turning into a repeat of Operation Desert Storm, whereby the US military felt that they did not get adequate cooperation from the CIA, then.
END: Mark accepts a new mission assignment in Afghanistan to become the CIA’s Deputy Chief of Base at Bagram Airbase, Afghanistan that elevates his standing as an Intelligence Officer. His responsibility will be to support CIA counterterrorism operations countrywide.
ACT 2:
SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA Headquarters (Office of Military Affairs, Branch Chief office), Langley, Virginia–Day
DESCRIPTION: Mark steps into the office to see what Doug has in store for him on his next assignment.
Mark: “Hey Doug! …. What’s the word?”
Doug: “Mark…Hey bud …how are you? … I’m seeing the flack from your cable has hit a raw nerve with Station. ….Your early departure without a word did not go over well either.”
Mark: “As I expected it would. ….I lost a lot of beauty sleep dealing with that ordeal. After 40 hours of no sleep, l was looking like the poster child for birth control.” … Doug laughs.
“Besides…After the way I was treated with disdain and disrespect??? … I wanted them to symbolically see my elbows and asshole in defiance walking away.“
“…So they can blow it out of their asses, if they think I was going to give them further satisfaction by screaming at me….Absolutely no way.”
Doug: “I can understand your point of view.”
Mark: “The worst part is that this whole affair could have all been prevented had Banks took a moment to talk to both parties. … Also had Station’s Chief of Security not blown off Gary then they all would be viewed as superheroes right now.” ….
“Plus….D’Angelo, the COS, if he ever stopped with his ‘SUPERIORITY COMPLEX” mentality in dealing with the regular military….Things would go a lot smoother in relationships with the Warfighters on the ground if the chip on his shoulder fell off….”
Doug: “….Would you agree their unwillingness to deal with conventional forces is simply creating tensions and lack of cooperation….. just as it did during Desert Storm?….”
Mark: “Yes…. Anyway…that’s neither here nor there…..Bottom line, this office sending out inexperienced folks from to Station does not help the situation either.”
Doug: “I agree, but we’re so short handed …We’re just tossing warm bodies out to fill the gap. …Right now as it stands, Reilly is furious. ….He’s been raising Hell with the office director.”
Mark: “I’ve already addressed my concern with the investigator overseeing this. …I told her flat out that I expected to be retaliated against.”
Doug: “Well….On that note, I’ve arranged for you to replace our guy in Bagram, Afghanistan as the Deputy Chief of Base. He has been there a while and is ready to come home. …I originally had you scheduled for Kuwait to sit on the US commanding general’s staff, but that’s been in flux and has not come to fruition just yet.”
Mark: “OK.. Interesting…. Has the Chief of Station there approved of my coming out?” … and who is the COS there?”
Doug: “He’s called ‘The Spider’ by President Karzai himself…Greg Vogel. …He’s been there nearly two years himself at Karzai’s request after he saved Karzai’s ass from an assassination attempt.”
Mark: “Ok… So what will my mission be overall and when do you have me heading out?”
Doug: “Your primary function will be to support Agency counterterrorism operations countrywide in theater with the resources that the airbase has to bring to table.”
….“As for your departure…You are already scheduled on the flight heading out in 2 weeks. …. So go home, relax and get your affairs in order and be ready to head out then. ….See you in two weeks.”
Mark: “Okie Dokie! … See ya then, but in the meantime you can use your desk as a bunker to shield yourself from incoming rounds from Reilly. ….Mark laughs as he departs.
DESCRIPTION: Doug doesn’t find not much to smirk at, since he knows he dropped the ball in the whole matter leaving Mark holding the bag in Iraq.
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ACT 2:
SCENE OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
BEGINNING: DCOS tries to pressure the OMA Office Director to have Mark fired and blames him for mishandling the situation when new information came to light, just as he is to blame for the negative review of Station’s interaction with the military.
MIDDLE: OMA Director admits his office was partly responsible and basically takes his lumps from Station.
END: DCOS notes his intentions to hold up Mark’s pay cable voucher pending his staff’s investigation of irregularities.
ACT 2:
SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
DESCRIPTION: DCOS Reilly calls OMA Director (Redcloud) on the Green Line to express Station’s disappointment of Mark’s tour and how he handled the entire affair. Reilly tries to get the Director to fire Mark, but the Branch Chief stands defends Mark and squashes the idea.
Redcloud: Answers his phone: “OMA Director!”
Reilly: “Redcloud…Reilly here in Iraq Station. ….What the Hell is going on with you guys?… I asked for support from your office and all I get out here is a shit bag sent out here!…I’m talking about Mark. ….Since day 1 he’s been nothing, but a disaster.”
Redcloud: “Yeah I am surprised as you are by his actions to leave so soon.”
Reilly: “Not just that….He should have gotten a hold of Banks who was filling in as Acting Chief of Station to head this off, but instead he leaves us a shit show. …Just as he did with the Director’s negative feedback on Station’s relationship with the US military. …He made us look stupid. ….Once again…. he is unreliable. ….I want him fired!”
Redcloud: “Well…there is more involved before we can take such an action. ..His branch chief says we are partly to blame…. and in regards to the DCI’s representative and my Branch Chief who met with the four military command elements says Mark was busy taking care of logistics to get them in and out of Iraq in 5 days, so he was not present, but for only one meeting and that one nearly got them all killed when the aircraft engine failed.”
Reilly: “I don’t care!….He needs fired. …I don’t want him anywhere near this theater of operation. ….GOT IT???”
Redcloud: “Yeah …Yeah!”
Reilly: “Well…one more thing! …His cable he submitted noting hours worked for 3 months that needs to be filed monthly shows discrepancies and I am holding up approval of his cable pending further investigation and I’ll be responding then.”
Redcloud: “Fair enough.” Reilly hangs the phone up.
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ACT 2:
SCENE OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
BEGINNING: DCOS fabricates a ruse to have Mark charged with a felony and be prosecuted.
MIDDLE: Reilly lays out his plan and intentions to Pedro who eagerly approves.
END: Pedro takes charge of writing the cable for the DCOS and appropriate Station personnel to concur on.
ACT 2:
SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (DCOS office), Baghdad, Iraq–Day
DESCRIPTION: DCOS Reilly is dissatisfied with OMA’s lack of balls to fire Mark so he calls Pedro into his office to discuss Mark’s pay voucher. Reilly has an underlying plan to quench his thirst for revenge by having Mark investigated and prosecuted for committing a felony, if all goes right with his scheme.
Reilly: “Pedro!!! …..Come in here!.” Pedro stands up from his computer sitting in the corner of the bay and scurries off to Reilly’s office.
Pedro: “You rang???”
Reilly: “You bet I did….. Listen up…I need to review that pay voucher of Mark’s. I want you to assess when he was not here in your presence to observe that he was actually working. …I need you to tally up the hours and reflect that in a cable that you are going to write….I want a dollar figure amount.”
Pedro: “OK??”
Reilly: “My intentions are to fuck the son-of-a-bitch over and send him to prison, if we can show that he tried to overcharge the Agency for hours not worked.” Pedro smiles and nods his head in approval.
Pedro: “Got it Chief! …I’ll get right on it!”
Reilly: “Take your time… The longer the asshole has to wait for his money the better as far as I am concerned.”
DESCRIPTION: Pedro chuckles and slowly shuffles to imitate the speed of which the request is to take place as he goes back off to his desk.
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ACT 2:
SCENE OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (COS’ Office), Kabul, Afghanistan–Day
BEGINNING: Mark arrives in Afghanistan two weeks later to be briefed by COS “The Spider” to be Deputy Chief of Base and that his title is what the military will recognize as Station’s representative to Division Headquarters, not his pay grade.
MIDDLE: COS outlines Mark’s mission and expectations while serving as D/COB.
END: Mark prepares to disembark for Bagram on his new assignment, but not before he visits the CIA’s Talibar.
ACT 2:
SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA Station (COS’ Office), Kabul, Afghanistan–Day
DESCRIPTION: “The Spider” welcomes Mark to Station and provides his expectations of Mark serving as the CIA’s Deputy Chief of Base of Bagram Air Base. Mark assures the COS that he will do his very best and outlines his history with the CIA and US Army Reserves.
The Spider: “I’ve heard a great deal of your exploits.”…in a joking manner…Mark cracks a smile,
not sure if the COS has really heard anything. …..
Mark: “Sir, the one thing that I must remind you is that I am an IC and under COTR (Contract) regulations that I am not supposed to assume a leadership role.”
The Spider: “Yes, I know but out here I make the rules and you will assume that leadership role. It’s a title the US military respects and they do not need to know the details…..Bottom line you represent the CIA under Kevin who is Chief of Base out there.”
…”Kevin has been COB for a year and has several months to go before his tour ends so
it will be a good overlap for the two of you.”
…”Your mission here is to get to learn Bagram Airbase inside and out. You will be the go
to guy for everything as you will be supporting Station and all its bases countrywide in counterterrorism operations…..
…”That means fuel, medical support, supplies, military and Agency air operational support, and you’ll also be the guy who interacts with the Bagram Internment Facility that houses all the bad guys.”
…”Any more dumb questions?? …he laughs…
Mark: “No sir.”
DESCRIPTION: Mark departs the COS’ office and visits the infamous CIA “Talibar” he’s heard so much about for the first time hoping for a drink and wonders facetiously to himself, if they have a “Gift Shop.” Then his next stop is the cafeteria, follow by the flight line for his last stop to Bagram.
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ACT 2:
BEAT SHEET MIDDLE SCENES: PROTAGONIST’S NEW PLAN IS EXECUTED:
SLUG: INT–CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM AIR BASE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
–Mark reports to the base at Bagram, coincidently just a few days after four high level Al-Qaeda members escape the internment facility there and unexpectedly he is greeted by an armed Afghani at his door with a proposal.
SLUG: INT–CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM AIR BASE, AFGHANISTAN–NIGHT
–After nearly 3 months goes by at Bagram, Mark’s pay voucher cable is finally released by the DCOS in Iraq that falsely accuses Mark of a ruse which Mark eventually decides to ignore.
SLUG: EXT/INT–BAGRAM FLIGHT LINE AND CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM AIR BASE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
–Mark is paid an unexpected visit from his home office director and the DCI’s Associate Director for Military Affairs.
SLUG: INT–CIA HEADQUARTERS (OFFICE OF SECURITY-INVESTIGATOR’S OFFICE), LANGLEY, VIRGINIA–Day
–Office of Security reviews DCOS Iraq cable accusing Mark of intentionally overcharging the Agency (a felony), but decides not to investigate, question, charge, nor prosecute as it’s considered to be an act of retaliation by Reilly.
SLUG: INT–CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
–Mark’s 17 month tour is complete and he brief’s his replacement who followed behind him in Iraq and warns Mark that Reilly still has a burr up his ass for him.
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ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES OUTLINE: PROTAGONIST’S NEW PLAN IS EXECUTED:
SLUG: INT–CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM AIR BASE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
BEGINNING: After Mark reports to base for introductions and orientation. Later he is greeted at the door by an armed Afghani with a proposal to help the base acquire a Stinger component.
MIDDLE: Mark and Joe discuss the recovery of a Stinger missile component with an Afghan interpreter who works for the US Army. The seller is from the Pakistani side of the border
END: The Chief of Base later tells Mark four high level Al-Qaeda members escaped just a few short days before from the Bagram Internment Facility and Mark straps his sidearm on from then on. The purchase of the Stinger component ultimately takes 6 months.
ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES DIALOG: PROTAGONIST’S NEW PLAN IS EXECUTED:
SLUG: INT–CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM AIR BASE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY/NIGHT
DESCRIPTION: The CIA base consists of double stacked cargo shipping containers that are sandbagged on the roof laid out in a square shaped formation surrounded heavily by concertina and chain linked fencing. Other government agencies like DIA, NSA etc are collated near the Agency and collectively known as OGA. The 10th Mountain Division Headquarters and Bagram Internment Facility are each located a mere 300 feet from the CIA base. Bagram Air Base houses 14,000 coalition forces and contractors.
Mark: “Good afternoon Chief! … I am the new guy… Mark your new DCOB.” Mark extends his
hand out to shake the COB’s hand with a smile.
COB Joe: “Welcome to Bagram. …I’ll let you get settled in and meet our
communications officer and the senior Science and Technology advisor when they get
back from lunch. “
OTHER DIALOG:
DESCRIPTION: (VOICEOVER:) Six months would pass before Joe and I would purchase a Stinger grip stock for $10,000. The four Al Qaeda detainees were never captured.
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ACT 2
MIDDLE SCENES OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM AIR BASE, AFGHANISTAN–NIGHT
BEGINNING: The Iraq Station DCOS finally releases Mark’s pay cable. The Chief of Base flags the cable to Mark’s attention as it poses a serious accusation.
MIDDLE: Mark carefully reviews Reilly’s cable and fights the strong desire to contact the Agency Inspector General, the Ombudsman and Office of General Counsel to file a complaint.
END: Mark ignores the cable and wants to focus instead on the mission at hand, but other events will overtake Mark’s attention, as well.
ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM AIR BASE, AFGHANISTAN–NIGHT
DESCRIPTION: Nearly two months into the tour, Mark has a cable flagged to his attention by the COB (Joe). Mark takes a moment to review the cable and advises the Chief that it’s in relation to what transpired in Iraq. Deep down Mark wants to file a complaint in writing, but that will take much of his time and he already puts in a full day and ports of the night.
Joe: “Mark a cable just came in for you and you really need to address it.”
Mark: “OK…Thanks.”
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ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES OUTLINE:
SLUG: EXT/INT–BAGRAM FLIGHT LINE AND CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM AIR BASE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
BEGINNING: Mark is paid an unexpected visit from his home office director and the DCI’s Associate Director for Military Affairs. Mark is greeted like a long lost pal from the DCI Representative, but his Office Director avoids Mark speaking only to Joe the COB.
MIDDLE: Redcloud seeks to place a cap limit on the hours Mark works. Joe scoffs at this idea and tells the director he may as well pull his support from the base as that idea would shift the lion’s share of work on him.
END: Mark feels reassured from the COB’s efforts to stand up for him and feels no further action will like be taken given the warm reception he had from DCI Representative that his office director clearly witnessed.
ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM AIR BASE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
DESCRIPTION: Two months into Mark’s tour, Joe alerts Mark that the OMA office will be paying our base a surprise visit and seeks a meeting with the 10th Mountain Division commander. Mark is expected to pick the 2 visitors up at the flight line and bring them to base.
JOE: “Mark I just got word from Station that VIPs…being your boss –the OMA Office Director,
Redcloud, is surprising us with his presence and he’s bringing along the DCI’s Associate Director for Military Affairs (Galland)…..”
“….I need you to go get them at the airfield and I’ll be taking them over to meet the
Division Commander…..they’ll be here in an hour.”
Mark: “Roger!! ….sorta sudden isn’t it?. …”
SLUG: EXT/INT–BAGRAM FLIGHT LINE, BAGRAM AIR BASE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
(Video Narrated Vignette)
DESCRIPTION: Mark meets the visitors at the flight line. The DCI’s Representative remembers Mark from the last time he visited Iraq and acts as if they are old buddies from years past given they nearly died in the near mid air accident. The Representative shakes Mark’s hand and gives him a hug and several slaps on the back. Redcloud, however, is distant, and has no interest to address Mark speaking only to Joe the COB. …following the meetings the VIPs depart and Joe tells Mark what transpired between him and Redcloud.
Joe: “Mark…..Redcloud had a chat with me. He asked that I restrain you to just working 14
hours a day….”
DESCRIPTION: (VOICEOVER:) For the remainder of my tour I heard nothing further from Reilly and his attempts to retaliate. I figured the Office of Security and the Associate Director for Military Affairs was keeping my office and Reilly in check.
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ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA HEADQUARTERS (OFFICE OF SECURITY-INVESTIGATOR’S OFFICE), LANGLEY, VIRGINIA–Day
BEGINNING: Office of Security Investigator reviews DCOS Iraq cable accusing Mark of a felony and decides to discuss the case with her Branch Chief.
MIDDLE: The investigator notes Mark’s history with the Office of Security and the fact he obtained guidance from three key Iraq Station personnel.
END: The CIA Office of Security chooses to shelve the case and does not choose to investigate, question, charge, nor prosecute Mark in the four years that follow the incident, while Mark continues to serve the CIA.
ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA HEADQUARTERS (OFFICE OF SECURITY-INVESTIGATOR’S OFFICE), LANGLEY, VIRGINIA–Day
DESCRIPTION: The investigator sitting at her desk sees the incoming cable from Iraq Station calling into question Mark’s three month pay voucher. She briefs her Branch Chief.
Investigator: “Chief… I am looking at a cable that just came in from Iraq Station.
Branch Chief: “Yes….I saw it. That’s the case we’ve anticipated to be a reprisal against the OMA officer?“
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ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
BEGINNING: Mark’s 17 month tour is complete and he brief’s his replacement who followed behind him in Iraq. Mark gives his replacement the load down of his job and being a liaison.
MIDDLE: Mark addresses some of the pit falls of the job like the Silent Salute ceremonies and dealing with injured Afghan forces that support their respective CIA bases, as well as a 14 year old that lost three limbs in an explosion.
END: Robert warns Mark that Reilly has not forgotten about him and advises Mark not to let his guard down or take for granted the protection he may have enjoyed before.
ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENE DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA BASE OFFICE, BAGRAM, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
DESCRIPTION: After 17 months of service, Mark is briefing his replacement as DCOB (Robert) who followed after Mark in Iraq. Mark is discussing responsibilities and success he has experienced while serving as DCOB. Robert advises Mark to head his warnings that Reilly is still looking out for blood.
Mark: “Good Morning Robert. …I am going to give you an overview of what your primary
function as DCOB will be and what you may encounter or should be prepared to encounter, if the situation arises.“
Robert: “Sounds great!”
(Video Narrated Vignette)
Robert: “I did see where our 2,000 Stingers back it the day were conveniently stored in a cave
that accidently blew up, so they’re a lot harder to come by. …”
(Video Narrated Vignette)
“Oh one last point on that subject… I have also tried to coordinate with the Army here in
buying back Apache gunship Hellfire missiles and mobile towed radar systems from the black market.”
(Video Narrated Vignette)
Mark: “No, but while inspecting 12 crates of Soviet era Mig fighter air-to-air missiles, along with
three dump trucks filled with explosive munitions, I was exposed to nearly 3 hours of radioactive material leaking from them. …”
“The Special Forces soldier who was inspecting the munitions, as well, waited until the
end to run the Geiger Counter over the shit. …..My heart sank.”
(Video Narrated Vignette)
Mark: “A few months after I got here shit hit the fan when the commanding general discover
DIA was collecting all sorts of explosive material they obtained in trades…like mortars, C-4 explosives and anti tank mines… They had 1/3rd of a connex filled with the stuff…”
(Video Narrated Vignette)
Mark: “Yes, that occurs when a US soldier is killed. ….14,000 soldiers and contractors will line
both sides of the road here on Route Disney to render, while standing at attention, a salute in silence as a flag draped casket is driven slowly to the airfield for a small ceremony before the remains are placed in the belly of a C-130 for the journey home.”
(Video Narrated Vignette)
Mark: “Well…I’ve been called upon to arrange incoming medevacs for our own guys and
indigenous forces that we train at the bases or persons of interests to PSYOP. ….”
(Video Narrated Vignette)
Mark: “Then there was the one air insertion training exercise that disembarked a team into a
old Soviet minefield that resulted in the Afghan soldier getting a leg blown off…..
(Robert squeamish at the idea)….”
(Video Narrated Vignette)
“A short war story for you…I got called up one time from our Asadabad Base PSYOP
officer to arrange first class care for an influential tribal elder’s son…”
“His son was picking up sprint brass to sell….on our base. “
(Video Narrated Vignette)
“But the highlight came during President George Bush’s surprise visit…that was quite
interesting…..The US Secret Service sends out a detail to coordinate his visit 2 weeks in
advance of the President’s arrival. …”
DESCRIPTION: (VOICEOVER): To this day I still suffer from the memories of attending those many Silent Salute ceremonies during my tour. Years later…for reasons you will understand later, I would wish I could have swapped places with those who died with honor.
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ACT 2:
BEAT SHEET MIDDLE SCENES: PLAN FAILS…THEN…:
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA STATION, KABUL, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
–Mark takes on the new role as Station’s Psychological Warfare Operations in Kabul, Afghanistan and carries out his first mission at hand.
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA STATION, KABUL, AFGHANISTAN–DAY/Night
–Mark uncovers an important Station asset’s secret.
SLUG: INT–CIA SAFEHOUSE, KABUL, AFGHANISTAN–NIGHT
–Mark facilitates Taliban defections, including two suicide bombers that he uses in a campaign.
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA FALCON BASE, KUNAR PROVINCE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY/NIGHT
–Mark redeploys along the Afghan/Pak border of Kunar Valley in what would test his skills and it begins with cleaning up a Navy S.E.A.L. operation gone bad.
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA FALCON BASE, KUNAR PROVINCE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY/NIGHT
–The new Chief of Station for Afghanistan arrives, it’s Mark’s old boss from Iraq that results in rising tensions and another hostile work environment the last 5 months of his tour.
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA FALCON BASE, KUNAR PROVINCE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY/NIGHT
–A Congressional Delegation visits Falcon Base and Mark is asked to brief his successes.
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA FALCON BASE, KUNAR PROVINCE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY/NIGHT
–One month from leaving his post, Mark suddenly experiences catastrophic failure across the board on assets and PSYOP resources that had a proven track record for 2 plus years.
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ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES OUTLINE: PLAN FAILS…THEN…:
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA STATION, KABUL, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
BEGINNING: Mark moves on to his next 3 month assignment as a Psychological Warfare Officer to support the CIA’s Counterterrorism operations countrywide from the Station in Kabul, Afghanistan. He begins first to restore harmony to Afghanistan by saving a cat, before his first mission.
MIDDLE: Mark prepares to conduct his first mission to serve as the “Milkman” carrying $300,000 in cash to the presidential palace.
END: Mark succeeds in his efforts to make it to the palace without incident and is warmly welcomed by the National Security Council’s assistant.
ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES DIALOG: PLAN FAILS…THEN…:
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA STATION, KABUL, AFGHANISTAN–DAY
DESCRIPTION: Mark’s 3 months are anything, but dull. During his stay at the CIA Station which occupies the former Hotel Ariana in Kabul, Afghanistan known as the American Embassy Annex. The facility sits just blocks from the Afghan presidential palace where Mark will find himself making the “Milkman Run” to deliver $300,000 a month in cash each month to the National Security Council’s office.
COS Chris: “Good morning Mark. ….What’s new?”
Mark: “Well…I did my part to restore harmony here in Afghanistan…
Chris: “Really??? ….How so?”
(Video Narrated Vignette)
DESCRIPTION: Mark is seen collecting the money from Station Finance, sealed in four large manilla envelopes and stuffed into two large satchels. The Finance officer points to a map on the wall to show where Hotel Ariana sits in relation to where the palace sits. Mark picks up both heavy satchels and exits through the hallway down the steps and out the front door of the ‘hotel’ passed the water pond where he had saved the feral cat’s life earlier then through the streets of Kabul’s heavily quarantine area two blocks over to the presidential palace. Mark is permitted to by pass the palace security and directed to the National Security Advisor’s office where he is greeted by an assistant. Mark passes the two satchels that are promptly emptied of their contents and returned back to Mark. Mark smiles and thanks the assistant and returns back to Station in good health..
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SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA STATION, KABUL, AFGHANISTAN–DAY/NIGHT
BEGINNING: Mark sets up a meeting with an important Station asset who thinks he is slick with the $200,000 he repeatedly tries to avoid accounting for.
MIDDLE: Mark meets with the asset to ascertain the status of the receipts and progress of the asset’s project that was being funded. Mark turns up the heat asking the asset for the projects location and photographs. Visibly defensive, the asset tries a runaround with Mark and goes so much as to provide a misleading photograph to throw Mark off his trail.
END: Mark starts from scratch and performs an asset assessment the way the professional Case Officers are suppose to routinely perform. Mark learns the asset is not just trying to pull the wool over the Station’s eyes on the project, but has a very important secret that opens up a whole new opportunity for the CIA.
ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES DIALOG:
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA STATION, KABUL, AFGHANISTAN–DAY/NIGHT
DESCRIPTION:
Chris: “Well Mark…Now that you did that mission so good, I have a someone of great
importance to the Station that you will have to take over. He is an important asset.”
Mark: “OK.”
Chris: “We have financed him for the last couple of years since we recruited him. ….”
“His name is Saad and he oversees a power projection platform in country and he
is becoming a bit cocky. …The Chief of Operations here recruited him a few years back.”
(Video Narrated Vignette)
DESCRIPTION: Mark suspects something is up. Mark reviews Saad’s dossier: Saad is married to an Australian woman, but has an Iranian American girlfriend, hates Iran and all it stands for….
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ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA SAFEHOUSE, KABUL, AFGHANISTAN–NIGHT
BEGINNING: Mark is approached by a Case Officer (John) who is a former DELTA FORCE soldier and he and Mark embarks on a mission to facilitate the defection of Taliban commanders and two suicide bombers that would be similar to the Kit Carson Scouts initiative during the Vietnam era.
MIDDLE: Mark was able to secure funding for a safehouse and with the assistance of the ‘Peace Through Strenth’ program, Mark and John are able to facilitate 14 Taliban commanders through the defection program for a pardon, in addition to two drugged suicide bombers hooked on heroin.
END: Mark would use–with the help of the Afghan Minister of Defense–the two suicide bombers who defected to counter Taliban/Al Qaeda propaganda campaigns.
ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES DIALOG:
SLUG: INT–CIA SAFEHOUSE, KABUL, AFGHANISTAN–NIGHT
DESCRIPTION: Two months into the job and Mark is presented with an interesting opportunity that has not been seen since the Vietnam era. John, a Case Officer, handles high level figures that often riles competing Case Officers who are jealous and try to sabotage him by providing derogatory reporting against his assets. John is casual in his demeanor and is the closest thing to ‘James Bond’ Mark has seen himself in the Agency, though he’s heard about one other 10 years ago. John approaches Mark to see if his office can fund a safehouse in Kabul to house Taliban commanders defecting back to the Afghan government in exchange for their followers to lay down their weapons. Mark agrees and immediately sends a message through the internal notes system back to Washington for their thoughts and funding before sending an official cable.
John: “Hi…I understand you are the Station’s PSYOP Officer?…”
Mark: “Yes the one and only we got here until reinforcements get here……(he laughs)…what
can I do for you?”
(Video Narrated Vignette)
DESCRIPTION: With COS Chris concurrence, John makes his journey to the Afghan/Pak border where he convinces 14 Taliban commanders from ….
DESCRIPTION: (VOICEOVER): In my time I served in Afghanistan, If it did not try to bite you, stab you, or stick you it tried to eat you, it shot at you, rocketed, mortared, or layed an IED to kill you and I survived it all to include another near mid air disaster. However, I never thought I would see the day that I would have several smiling Taliban leaders wave at me to say thank you and goodbye.
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ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES OUTLINE:
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA FALCON BASE, KUNAR PROVINCE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY/NIGHT
BEGINNING: Mark redeploys along the Afghan/Pak border of Kunar Valley and puts his skills to the test with just two weeks on the ground as he begins a month-long cleanup to hide the hand of the US Government after a Navy S.E.A.L. operation goes bad.
MIDDLE: Mark wages a counter offensive using a night letter to support a false flag operation to save the life of an influential tribal elder who will owe him a great debt of gratitude.
END: Mark finds he is now a permanent addition to the base in what was initially supposed to be a 3 month tour to appease the Falcon Chief of Base.
ACT 2:
MIDDLE SCENES DIALOG:
SLUG: EXT/INT–CIA FALCON BASE, KUNAR PROVINCE, AFGHANISTAN–DAY/NIGHT
DESCRIPTION: Multiple base assets report an Al Qaeda facilitator is operating across the border in Arandu, Pakistan from Dokalam, Afghanistan. The base has an embedded Navy S.E.A.L. team, but it becomes necessary to fly in two more S.E.A.L. snipers who have been tasked to conduct a ‘clandestine’ cross border shot to remedy the operative harmless. However, on that day, three of our nation’s finest cannot hit water if they fell out of a boat in the middle of the Atlantic.
COB Kevin: “Mark…I know you just joined the base just two weeks ago and had road trip to the
village we are preparing an operation for. ….How confident do you think the tribal elder
we met will support our operation?
Mark: “I am sure he’ ll be supportive as it was his nephew who was killed by that Al Qaeda
guy…You see…Al Qaeda targeted an Afghan Border Patrol convoy and it was his
nephew who was killed. …So he has a blood feud going on.”
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ACT 2:
BEAT SHEET TURNING POINT 2: MID–POINT:
SLUG: INT–CIA HEADQUARTERS (Home Office) LANGLEY, VIRGINIA–DAY
–Mark returns to the US for a 4 month R&R and makes arrangements for his return to Falcon Base.
SLUG: INT–CIA HEADQUARTERS (Home Office) LANGLEY, VIRGINIA–DAY
–Returning back to Washington, DC for a 3-day mission prep and medical clearance in May, as directed, before his deployment to Afghanistan.
SLUG: INT–WASHINGTON-DULLES INT’L AIRPORT (CHECK BAGGAGE) CHANTILLY, VIRGINIA–DAY
–Mark checks in his baggage, but later learns it disappeared with a treasure trove of identity theft material and coincidentally the CIA has a facility at the same site with access to the terminals and carousels.
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
–After a month of his office stalling, Mark learns by phone he has been Blacklisted.
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
–Mark begins to contest his Blacklisting and in the meantime makes arrangements to return back to active duty with his Army Reserve unit, but suddenly falls ill that takes 5 months to recover from before the life changing diagnosis is delivered.
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ACT 2:
TURNING POINT 2 OUTLINE: MID–POINT:
SLUG: INT–CIA HEADQUARTERS (Home Office) LANGLEY, VIRGINIA–DAY
BEGINNING: Mark returns to the US for a 4 month R&R and makes arrangements for his return to Falcon Base. Mark expresses concern to his Branch Chief (Joe) that all his assets were suddenly declared unworthy to be used, despite a plethora of program verifications and some were polygraphed.
MIDDLE: Joe looks troubled by the notion that all assets were rendered unfavorable and makes an inquiry to the Collection Management Officer overseeing analysis that rendered the decision.
END: Joe learns the CMO based their decision from recent multiple derogatory reporting from Case Officer John’s reporting.
ACT 2:
TURNING POINT 2 DIALOG SCENE: MID–POINT:
SLUG: INT–CIA HEADQUARTERS (Home Office) LANGLEY, VIRGINIA–DAY
DESCRIPTION: Mark’s return to Headquarters to express his concerns about the assets being denounced causes raises eyebrows and more controversy for Joe than he cares for.
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ACT 2:
TURNING POINT 2 OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–CIA HEADQUARTERS (Home Office) LANGLEY, VIRGINIA–DAY
BEGINNING: Returning back to Washington, DC for a 3-day mission prep and medical clearance in May, as directed, before his deployment to Afghanistan.
MIDDLE: Ironically, Mark finds he is becoming uneasy and senses something is wrong, but refuses to accept his own gut instincts. His instincts are validated when he sees COS Reilly in the Agency cafeteria.
END: Mark learns the deployment is not going as planned and directed to return home. He is asked to turn in his badge and passport. This is not the first time such a request has been made of Mark so he is not surprised.
ACT 2:
TURNING POINT 2 DIALOG SCENE:
SLUG: INT–CIA HEADQUARTERS (Home Office) LANGLEY, VIRGINIA–DAY
DESCRIPTION: Mark, however, is growing increasingly uncomfortable to be at CIA Headquarters as his guts tell him something is wrong. He joins a colleague (Nathan) he has known for 16 years for lunch in the CIA cafeteria and there he sees COS Reilly.
DESCRIPTION: (VOICEOVER) As Mark prepares for his mission he reads about an American soldier who was captured by the Taliban. Ironically Mark recalls reading about a captured soldier the month before he returned home. The soldier in question is Bo Berghdal who is identified as a traitor who went AWOL and was held in captivity for 5 years. Ironically the official date of his capture is noted six months after Bo Berghdal reportedly disappeared.
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ACT 2:
TURNING POINT 2 OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–WASHINGTON-DULLES INT’L AIRPORT (CHECK BAGGAGE), CHANTILLY, VIRGINIA–DAY (AND)
SLUG: INT–DELTA AIRLINE TERMINAL, PALMBAY, FLORIDA–DAY
BEGINNING: Mark checks in his baggage for his return flight and is glad he no longer is on the same flight with COS Reilly. Mark prays the J-Lo crashes with all onboard to survive, but him.
MIDDLE: Once Mark arrives home in Florida, he notices his luggage is not present at the terminal. The luggage contains a treasure trove of identity theft tax information material and Mark files a notice with Delta Airlines of the missing luggage.
END: Mark remembers that the CIA has a facility at the same site with access to the terminals and carousels. Mark knows that only the Chief of Counterterrorism Center could order his bag removed and through a little research discovers the former COS of Iraq (D’Angelo) is in charge of CTC, hence Reilly and D’Angelo, he suspects are behind the theft of his luggage.
ACT 2:
TURNING POINT 2 DIALOG SCENE:
SLUG: INT–WASHINGTON-DULLES INT’L AIRPORT (CHECK BAGGAGE), CHANTILLY, VIRGINIA–DAY (AND)
SLUG: INT–DELTA AIRLINE TERMINAL, PALMBAY, FLORIDA–DAY
DESCRIPTION:
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ACT 2:
TURNING POINT 2 OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
BEGINNING: After a month of his office stalling, Mark learns by phone he has been Blacklisted. The Branch Chief tells Mark he is baffled that after 2 plus years of service that he is surprised by the office director’s move.
MIDDLE: Mark discloses to Joe that he is being retaliated against by COS Reilly because his ego was bruised when Mark disclosed that his Station had screwed up an investigation that involved the downloading of child pornography on two CIA Top Secret computers.
END: Mark insists that an investigation needs to be opened into this and that he will take legal action and contact his US Senator who sits on the Senate Intelligence Committee.
ACT 2:
TURNING POINT 2 DIALOG SCENE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
DESCRIPTION:
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ACT 2:
TURNING POINT 2 OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
BEGINNING: Mark begins to contest his Blacklisting and in the meantime makes arrangements to return back to active duty with his Army Reserve unit to buy time while he takes on the CIA in a civil lawsuit that he intends to make publicly. He arranges for a medical physical as required by the US Army.
MIDDLE: Mark suddenly falls ill which ultimately takes 5 months to recover from. Mark believes that the Mononucleosis that he has suffered twice before and brought on from stress is what is afflicting him.
END: Mark receives a phone call 4 months after his Army physical. His unit’s brigade surgeon proceeds to scream over the phone that Mark has HIV and that he will be processed for discharge. Mark’s life changing diagnosis is delivered so bluntly and disrespectful he grabs his 44 magnum to commit suicide.
ACT 2:
TURNING POINT 2 DIALOG SCENE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
DESCRIPTION:
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LESSON 16: DR. AMADOR’S Has Completed Act 2 Draft 1:
***What i learned in this lesson is that I still don’t have all the facts, and a new scene came to me. I still don’t know how to incorporate it, but it will make my end of act two more intriguing.
****Perhaps Athena, tells robert of Sarah’s recent visit and this sets off a light bulb and he rushes over to her lecture at the university.
INT. SARAH’S LECTURE CLASS – DAY
BEGINNING: Sarah lecture’s on ancient mayan stone pyramids and temples; he tells her what an influence she’s had on his daughter. She brings up the mayan knowledge of “Zero”
Middle: Auggie follows her after class to her lab
End: he tells her that the idea of mayans was intuitive, that science must be intuitive as well and we must use emotions to look for intelligent life.
placeholder: perhaps the class club be more thorough and she explains math and mayan math and writing: THEN Auggie get’s a revelation : he goes after Sarah, tries to convince her, then convinces her to recruit others (fellow astronomers not in private hands) to help him —Robert— to relaunch their own “crystal” and make it align to webb satelites’ orbit !
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Lesson 16
Trish’s Completed Act 2 Draft 1
What I learned doing this assignment is that I really liked outlining all the scenes at once, before writing them individually. It was easier to make changes quickly and see the bigger picture.
1. Outline any scenes that you haven’t gotten to yet from Act 2.
Beginning: Emma questions the bartender about people having dreams.
Middle: They won’t engage with her. Olivia’s husband, Marcus, is around. She questions him. His dreams are fine. He thinks Olivia is overreacting. He believes she’s fine. Lucas is watching these conversations in the background. No one notices him.
End: Emma’s perplexed that he’s not having the dreams also.
Beginning: Emma’s working out
Middle: She has a vision or a memory pops into her head. It’s not just dreams now. This one is about her as a child playing alone in her room. Her dad watches tv by himself.
End: She puts her earbuds in and cranks her music up. This helps.
Beginning: At the front desk, a guest comes up mad. She says her ring was stolen.
Middle: The staff calls for Richard. He listens and tells her that the staff is trustworthy and honest and that they’ll find the ring. He asks what it looks like, etc. Next shot, they’re in the room and Richard finds it’s rolled under the bathroom counter, by the floor. He says they’ll clean it and bring it back. The guest is embarrassed.
End: he’s back with the shiny ring.
Beginning: Emma wakes up startled.
Middle: She fights off tears. Frustrated, she opens the laptop. Makes some notes.
End: shot of her working in the night
(this is boring – maybe need less of her dreams or more interest to them)
3 short scenes (not sure if they need to be all together):
1) Lucas does online research about the hotel. It’s all clean. Richard spies on his online activities.
2) Lucas talks to Sam or other staff, more discreetly than Emma does. More stealth maybe.
3) He talks to Emma about sharing knowledge. Tells her she’s too bold, cavalier. She rebuffs him.
(on hold for now – more scenes of the nightmares and aftermath?)
Beginning: Emma’s walking down the hall.
Middle: The guy we saw in the superhero dream grabs her to talk. He tells her of his dream. Another one that doesn’t seem like a big problem. He’s embarrassed though. He works for stodgy firm, might lose his job.
End: he asks her to help.
Tiny scene:
over the intercom, Richard invites any guest to talk to him if they are suffering in any way. He reminds them of the spa offerings to release stress.
(not sure if this would go better in Act 2B)
Two scenes back to back:
1) Richard’s on the phone with family member of guest. Richard explains that they had a heart attack and the doctor on staff did everything they could. The local authorities will deliver the body to the morgue for them to arrange transport home.
2) Coroner picks up the body. He asks if it’s another “heart attack”. Richard says yes. There’s some indication that Richard is paying this person off.
Tiny scene:
Emma puts her earbuds in again and feels more peaceful, like before. She sleeps with earplugs as a test.
Beginning: in his office, Richard types into his computer.
Middle: a message of suicide ideation appears, peaceful romping through the fields type image, seeing loved ones, etc.
End: hits send
Tiny scene:
Maria gets notified that Richard wants to see her (this is after he talks to Olivia but before the suicide message)
Beginning: Marcus wakes up and can’t wake up Olivia. He sees a pill bottle. Calls for the doctor.
Middle: Doctor can’t revive her.
End: Marcus cries or something.
2 scenes:
1) Emma joins the scene. Lucas is already there and tells her what happened. She screams at Richard. Blaming him. Lucas pulls her away.
2) He says again that they need to work together, but she brings up his case as proof that he’s no good. He says that one mistake doesn’t erase decades of good work. He convinces her to team up for their own safety.
2. Write out those scenes.
I’m not going to write them yet. This Act is possibly too long and Act 1 is too short. I’ll wait till I get further along and see what the next act is like.
3. With those scenes done, do a quick read of Act 2 and add/improve anything you’d like.
Done
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ASSIGNMENT #16
Finish Act 2! What I learned doing this assignment was that in order to catch up I had to keep writing and face the music of reading through my 20% scenes so far in Act 2 which was terrifying. Accepting that it was meant to only be 20% helped me to push through the fear.
ASSIGNMENT
1. Outline any scenes that you haven’t gotten to yet from Act 2.
EXT. ABBOTT KINNEY SIDEWALK – NIGHT
Carla and Harriet walk home towards Carla’s place.
Beginning: they joyfully laugh about the evening
Middle: omg my old boss
End: wanna come in for drunk eats?
INT. LIVING ROOM – NIGHT
Carla introduces Harriet to the babysitter and it is a weird moment.
Beginning: how’d it go
Middle: oh I am so rude, this is Harriet
End: that was weird.
EXT. PARK PLAYGROUND – DAY
Carla introduces Harriet to Sam, which goes gangbusters! They both think one another are awesome. Carla tells Harriet the plan for working back at the agency with Jennica failed. Carla invites Harriet over for dinner.
2. Write out those scenes.
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