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Lesson 17
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Laurie- Beginning of Act 3.
INT. WOODVILLE- 1992- ANNIE AND JOE CABIN-LIVING ROOM CONT.
Annie is still on her knees clutching her stomach. She slowly sits up and slips her hand down inside her bathrobe. She closes her eyes and feels that the scar is back. (we never see it)
ANNIE-35
I won’t desert you Maggie.
She then looks at a pair of Joe’s boots by the door and doubles over again.
ANNIE-35
How can I do this? It’s not fair, it’s not fair.
She scrubs her face with her hands then slowly rises and goes to the kitchen.
INT. ANNIE AND JOE’S CABIN, KITCHEN, 1992, AM
The clock shows 7:20. Annie has made an elaborate breakfast and is setting the plates on the kitchen table. The strain on her face increases when she hears the sounds of her family waking up and getting ready.[PLACEHOLDER]
Hunter comes into the kitchen, slings his backpack on the back of his chair and sits.
HUNTER-8
Mom! You made your homemade scones! On a school morning!
Erin comes in and sits. Annie-35 is keeping busy with her head down.
ERIN-10
Ohhh with your raspberry jam.
Hunter takes a bite.
HUNTER-8
MMMMH. You should sell these. We’d be rich.
The kids are quickly eating. Annie sets down another plate laden with food.
ERIN-10
Biscuits and gravy, Dad’s favorite! Is it your anniversary or something?
Annie can hardly speak. She avoids eye contact as she touches both Erin and Hunter when she passes behind their chairs and hurries back to the kitchen.
ANNIE-35
No… just uh.. I have to get ready for work.
Annie rushes down the hall.
JOE-35 (O.C.)
Did I hear biscuits and gravy?
Annie rushes into the bathroom and closes the door just as Joe opens the bedroom door and heads to the kitchen.
INT. ANNIE AND JOE’S BATHROOM, 1992, CONT.
Annie has sunk to the floor and is leaning against the door. We can hear the sounds of the family at breakfast. [PLACEHOLDER].
Annie stares at her hands, the one ring on her finger.
JOE-35 (O.C.)
Annie? Are you joining us for breakfast?
Annie opens her mouth to speak, but finds she can’t muster a sound. She gets up and turns the shower on, but doesn’t get in, just sits back down against the door. She whispers to herself.
ALTERED ANNIE-35
I’m not going crazy, I’m not. This is..trauma. Or a dream. But… but If I’m dreaming, when did I start the dream? When I as 60? Last night? Oh my god. Did I dream up the accident? Maybe there is no runaway truck. I don’t know what is real. Oh Sarita..help me.
JOE-35 (O.C.)
Hurry up guys, the bus is here!
(pause)
Hunter, don’t forget your lunch. Have a great day guys.
Annie hears the front door slam as the kids leave, then Joe-35’s footsteps that pause outside her door. Joe-35 knocks on the bathroom door.
JOE-35 (O.C.)
That was a awesome breakfast honey, definitely in the top five, maybe even the top three!
Annie doesn’t respond, just squeezes her eyes shut. The shower is still running, the bathroom growing steamy.
PLACEHOLDER ADD IN JOE POV
JOE-35
(pause)
I gotta go, I need to be there when they pour the foundation. I’ll see you tonight!
Annie clasps her hands over her mouth and silently weeps.
INT. JOE AND ANNIE’S CABIN, LIVING ROOM HALLWAY. CONT.
Joe grabs his keys from the hook and opens up the door. He pauses and calls out loudly.
JOE-35
Love you Annie!
He exits and slams the door.
Big pause.
Suddenly Annie-35 dashes down the hallway, throws open the door and runs out. Shiloh quickly escapes out the open door.
ANNIE-35
WAIT! Wait Joe, wait!
Joe is already in his truck, warming up in the driveway, but gets out to try to grab Shiloh.
JOE-35
Oops.. here girl!
Shiloh jumps into the open truck door just as Annie-35 reaches Joe-35. She throws her arms around him.
ANNIE-35
Joe, Joe, I love you.. I love you so much.
Joe laughs and hugs her back. She clings longer to him, half hysterical.
JOE-35
I love you too honey, but I gotta go to work.
ANNIE-35
Wait, just wait, don’t go yet.
Now Joe is concerned.
JOE-35
What’s going on?
ANNIE-35
It’s just… I’ve been having these dreams. Some of them are, are nightmares. And, and they are so very real.
JOE-35
(nods sympathetically)
About your mom?
ANNIE-35
Uh.. yes, and about other…people. And-
Joe-35’s attention is caught by something. Annie-35 notices. They both turn and watch a large logging truck come barreling down the street. They watch it pass, alarmed. Three seconds later, a tremendous crash is heard.
Joe-35 quickly slams the truck door to keep the dog in and they both dash out to the road and look down the little hill.
It’s a terrible scene. The truck is mangled, smoking.
JOE-35
Call 911!
He takes off running to the scene just a few hundred yards down the wooded road. The same path that Annie took in the Altered State memory.
Annie-35 is frozen to the spot. Eyes wide.
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Jeanne Sanner Reaction to Midpoint
What I got from this assignment: again, I got the value of outlining. It makes the scenes write themselves.
ACT 3
Key Scene 1 – React/rethink the new reality revealed by Mid-point
Key Scene 2 – Makes a new plan.
Key Scene 3 – Things start going well, until…
Key Scene 4 – Turning Point – Protagonist faces their lowest low
Scene 1 –Andrea shares her mission with Matt. Matt confesses he cannot forgive the police who killed his brother. Andrea gets together with Brad.
Scene 2 – Andrea goes to OC
Scene 3 – Things start going well, until…
Scene 4 – Andrea goes to dinner with her Father, things fall apart. Andrea learns that Justin has signed up for a different cruise ship. Laura tells Andrea that she may ultimately move in with Shep.
ACT 3
INT. ANDREA’S BEDROOM – SATURDAY – MORNING
Andrea is putting on jogging clothes, is calling Darin.
Andrea’s tone is somber.
ANDREA
Oh, good, you’re home. I’m going
for a little run, can you join me?
Darin hears Andrea’s tone. Keeps his tone light.
DARIN
Of course! Out of the office,
exercise, and you! Wow! Can’t beat
that!
EXT. PARK – MORNING
Andrea and Darin are walking.
DARIN
Not yet, but I’m getting close.
ANDREA
What will you do?
DARIN
Move out.
ANDREA
I’m really sorry, Darin. I know you
loved him.
DARIN
That’s the problem. I still do. If
it weren’t for Shep, I would be in
worse shape.
ANDREA
Shep?
DARIN
Yea, he’s been helping me sort
through the labyrinth.
ANDREA
How?
They pull sandwiches and water from the fanny paks.
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42.
DARIN
By helping me see that love, even
unconditional love, doesn’t mean
you take abuse. You have choices.
ANDREA
Choices? But, really, Darin, don’t
choices mean conditions?
DARIN
He taught me I am to ACCEPT Brad
unconditionally, meaning, I
shouldn’t try to change him…
ANDREA
We can’t really change anybody
anyway.
DARIN
True, but I sure have tried!
Anyway, we also need to love
ourself enough to say good-bye, if
that’s what we need… Now, enough
about me! I came with you to see
how you are!
ANDREA
Confused, discouraged, lost,
lonely, tired…Should I go on?
Darin nods.
ANDREA (CONT’D)
My search for how to forgive
started with a minister.
FADE OUT:
FADE IN:
EXT. PARK – CONTINUOUS
ANDREA
Everything I thought would help,
failed. So, I went to my sanctuary –
the library.
DARIN
Did you find anything there?
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43.
ANDREA
Two books look promising, but…
DARIN
God, I admire your determination,
Andi.
Andrea smiles.
Darin pats bench where Shep sits.
DARIN (CONT’D)
You know my solution.
ANDREA
Yea. If only…
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Margaret’S ACT 3 Begins
What I learned: Found I needed more scenes!
Jabe comes up with an idea and influences Alo to leave the city and take the Donek to Ebba.
Beginning: Jabe encourages Alo to move to Ebba
Middle: Jabe gives up former life to go to Ebba
Alo: Alo agrees to lead the Donek to Ebba
INT. ALO’S HOME – DAY
An animated Jabe eats with Alo and Imara.
JABE
I tell you, it sounds perfect!
ALO
But is it the will of Taaba?
Jabe hits his chest.
JABE
I feel it! I know it! I will help you, but we should do this now, before the Donek grow weaker.
IMARA
Jabe is right, Alo. I know Armann. Once he makes a move to destroy something or someone, he doesn’t stop.
Alo sighs, puts his head in his hands.
ALO
It has come to this, then.
JABE
We can do this, Alo. If this Ebba place is self-sustaining, we can just live there in peace, away from the murdering Hedeon.
Alo bows his head, meditates for a beat, then lifts sad eyes to Jabe and Imara.
ALO
You want to find your home. If you move with us to Ebba, you may never be able to leave.
Jabe considers this for a beat.
JABE
My life here feels like, well, like it has meaning, purpose, or something like I didn’t feel before. Sure, I’d miss my parents but, but, well, I don’t want to give up what I have now. I will go with you to Ebba. Besides, even if the Donek go to Ebba and I don’t, Armann will have me killed before I even make it home.
Jabe smiles, pats his chest.
JABE
The will of Taaba.
ALO
The will of Taaba. You will lead us then?
JABE
Lead? I’m more of a go-along guy.
ALO
You will need to lead. Your size will give the Donek the courage they need.
JABE
I’m not much of fighter.
ALO
You have the strength of the Orb.
JABE
Well, gotta do what I gotta do, then.
ALO
Then we will go. I will speak to the Donek.
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