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Lesson 19
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Jeanne Sanner See lesson 20. The scenes for this assignment are posted in lesson 20. Long story.🤗
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<div>Laurie- Act 3 turning point. Today I learned, again, that doing a brief outline helped expose what wasn’t going to work. So, I took a long shower, and it came to me. I went back, did a new outline and it practically wrote itself.</div>
INT. MARY-LOU SUNROOM 1992, ONE WEEK LATER, EARLY EVENING
Annie-35 is on the couch in the sunroom with the door closed, writing in a notebook. She hears a knock on Mary-Lou-45’s front door.
MARY-LOU-45 (O.C.)
Joe, wait, I’m so sorry but she doesn’t want to see you.
JOE-35 (O.C.)
Mary Lou I have to talk to her! Did you know about this letter? This doesn’t make any sense?!
Annie-35 hurries out the patio door of the sunroom as Joe knocks on the sunroom door.
JOE-35 (O.C.)
Annie, I know you’re here. I know you don’t mean this, talk to me.
But Annie-35 has climbed over the back yard fence and run. Joe opens the sunroom door, sees her through the patio door and runs after her.
EXT. MARY-LOU’S NEIGHBORHOOD 1992, EVENING, CONT.
Annie-35 runs through a neighbor’s yard, onto the sidewalk and keeps running. A moment later Joe-35 appears, sees her, and takes off after her.
JOE-35
Annie, wait! Annie please!
Annie keeps running, tears streaming down her face.
JOE-35
What did I do Annie? This isn’t fair!
Annie keeps running, nearing a small park.
JOE-35
Stop! Please! I deserve a reason!
A man walking his dog grows concerned as Annie hurries past.
DOG WALKER
Ma’am. Are you ok? Is this man bothering you?
Annie finally stops.
ANNIE-35
No, no, it’s ok!
DOG WALKER
Are you sure?
Joe has stopped running and holds up his hands in a calming motion.
JOE-35
I’m her husband.
Dog walker is unconvinced.
DOG WALKER
I live right over there, I can go call the police.
ANNIE-35
It’s fine, really. Really.
She sits down, ironically, on a tree root. Joe sits down right on the sidewalk where he is.
The man slowly walks on.
DOG WALKER
I’ll be watching, I can see the park from my window.
They watch him walk away. When he enters his house. Joe gets up to move nearer.
ANNIE-35
Please no, don’t come closer. Stay over there.
Joe sinks down on the edge of the grass, baffled.
JOE-35
Annie! Annie, I’m not going to hurt you! I just want to know what’s going on. What is wrong?! Whatever it is we can fix it. Seriously, what is it? Your letter…you’re leaving me? Why? Why Annie?
Annie is completely miserably, barely able to speak.
ANNIE-35
I, I can’t explain. I just …
JOE-35
Did you stop loving me Annie?
ANNIE-35
No! no… it’s just that…
JOE-35
Just WHAT Annie? Finish the sentence. Whatever it is, we will fix it! We can go to counseling, see a therapist. You said just last week you were going to go see one after you visited your mother.
Annie-35 doesn’t respond. Long pause. Joe sighs deeply.
JOE-35
I also wanted to tell you in person. I talked to Dr. Richards.
Annie explodes.
ANNIE-35
WHAT! Why would you call him? Why? Why would you do that? Because I wouldn’t come to the phone?! I’m not like her. I haven’t done anything! I haven’t hurt my kids! EVER. Not like she did to me. I’m not her!
In the distance, the dog walker steps out onto his front porch, watching them. Joe is alarmed and tries to calm her.
JOE-35
Annie, Annie calm down. Shh. Shh. Honey, I didn’t call him. He called the house.
Joe is looking at her with real concern now. Annie looks confused- then it hits her.
JOE-35
Your mom is in a coma. Could be anytime now.
ANNIE-35
Oh. Oh. I see. Thank you for telling me.
Silence again. Joe grows nervous. Annie-35 realizes that this horrible miscommunication could also be the only reason he could accept. Mary Lou-45 has now arrived in the background and is assuring the neighbor, who goes back into his house.
JOE-35
Annie. Honey. Last week, you said you were having … nightmares. And right before the accident, you said…you said something about having visions. About a baby.
Joe has cautiously crept a little closer. He reaches out to her, but she scoots away and turns her back on him.
ANNIE-35
Don’t touch me. Please don’t touch me.
JOE-35
Are you seeing..things, people? People that maybe aren’t there, that you are afraid of?
Annie-35, her back still to Joe-35, closes her eyes and gathers her resolve. She gives the smallest of shrugs.
Joe nods.
JOE-35
So that is why you left. Before something could happen.
Annie-35 gives a small shrug again. She notices Mary Lou-45 standing to the side.
JOE-35
Ok. Ok. I understand. This, this is a good sign. That you recognize that something is going on with you. We will get you some help. I’m not going to desert you.
ANNIE-35
I, I got to do this my way Joe. I’m going to have to go..somewhere. Tell the kids, tell them how very much I love them. And I will call them. And I will see them .. soon. I need you to go Joe, now. Please. Mary Lou is here. She, she knows.
Joe is struggling hard not to cry.
JOE-35
Ok, I get it. I will be waiting. Can I just, just give you a hug first?
ANNIE-35
Please don’t. I couldn’t bear it if you do. Just go Joe, please.
Joe-35 slowly gets to his feet, tears streaming down his face. He passes Mary Lou-45, grasps her outstretched hand for a moment, then struggles on. Once he has moved on, Mary Lou-45 rushes to Annie-45 and wraps her arms around her.
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Margaret’s turning point 3
What I learned: I have to show Jabe’s failure, even though he is the hero of the story.
Turning pt/huge failure:
1. EXT. EBBA FOOTHILLS – DAY
The Hedeon build the ramp as the Donek watch from the walls.
2. EXT. EBBA FORTRESS – DAY
Alo assures them Taaba is with them, they are protected while Jabe realizes he cannot help them.
Beginning: Armann and the Hedeon build a ramp and siege tower
Middle: The Donek confront Jabe and Alo, fearing for their lives.
End: Jabe admits he is useless
EXT. EBBA FOOTHILLS – DAY
Armann moves among the Hedeon, inspecting their work as they use tractors to move dirt to build an immense ramp leading up the mountain.
Hedeon men also work on an immense wooden structure, a siege tower, place wheels on it.
EXT. EBBA FORTRESS – DAY
The Donek Crowd watch from their walls, see that the ramp is halfway done. The Angry Donek Woman cries out.
ANGRY DONEK WOMAN
They are building a ramp! Nothing can stop them from reaching us! Armann will have them kill us all.
Alo attempts to calm the woman.
ALO
We came at the will of Alo. He will protect us.
Jabe looks out over the wall, notes the Hedeon’s progress. He does not say anything.
PATIENT DONEK
Woman! Listen to Alo, listen to the speaking of the Orb to your soul. Trust in Taaba.
The Angry Donek Woman moves to Jabe.
ANGRY DONEK WOMAN
What do you say? Weren’t you going to protect us? See for yourself, they will reach us soon. What plan do you have now?
Jabe looks out over the crowd. They wait expectantly for him to speak. He catches Alo’s eyes.
ALO
(to Jabe)
You must lead us.
A distressed Jabe has no answer for the woman, no plan.
His silence speaks volumes.
SMACK!
The Angry Woman moves to Jabe, hits him across the face.
ANGRY DONEK WOMAN
You brought us here to die!
Her action, and Jabe’s non-response anger the Donek Crowd. They erupt together with vicious verbal attacks.
DONEK CROWD
Meddler! Hedeon Spy! Evil man! Why did we listen to you, you know nothing! Spineless wimp! Leave and join the Hedeon!
Jabe steps back behind Alo, who holds his hands up to silence the crowd.
ALO
Are we not Donek? Why do we act as Hedeon? This man is not our saviour! We must trust in Taaba.
Alo turns to Jabe.
ALO
Speak to them, son.
Jabe clears his throat, looks at the expectant crowd, anger etched on their faces.
JABE
I don’t know what to say. I thought it was the will of Taaba to bring you here.
ANGRY DONEK WOMAN
You thought? You thought??
JABE
Listen, if I knew what to do I would do it. Just tell me what to do.
ALO
(to Jabe)
A leader does not ask his followers to lead. You have failed the work Taaba has given you.
Jabe turns, walks away from the crowd, mumbling to himself.
JABE
Yeah. That’s me. One big failure. Rub it in. As if I didn’t already know.
Alo watches Jabe walk away, turns back to the crowd.
ALO
We must pray to Taaba.
Alo falls to his knees, and the crowd follows suit. All but Imara, who rushes up to Jabe as he makes his way across the courtyard.
IMARA
Jabe, wait!
Jabe turns to see Imara, sees the Donek Crowd praying with Alo on their knees.
JABE
You think I should pray, too?
IMARA
I think you should figure this out! We have to survive, Jabe. If the Orb directed you to bring us here, he will give you the answer.
JABE
I got no answers. Don’t put your hopes on me, Imara.
Imara clutches Jabe’s arms.
IMARA
I left my son in the hands of Armann. He only knows the way of the Hedeon. I have to, I MUST get back to him, tell him of the Orb. I have to survive, not for me, but for him. Please, Jabe.
JABE
I’m real sorry about Grigo. He’s a nice kid, and if there is anything I could do, I would do it. But don’t you see? What can I do against a Hedeon army? I’m only one man? You all expect too much of me!
IMARA
Please, Jabe, please.
Jabe extracts himself from Imara’s grasp.
JABE
Begging won’t help. I’m useless here. Don’t look for help from me.
Imara watches as Jabe leaves, tears stain her face.
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