Lesson 2

[Tom Carroll]

Tom’s Great Hook:

I learned and used the Exchanging Components method to good effect. As part of this course, I began to think of a contained feature film that I had always wanted to reboot, but it belongs to a big studio that holds onto its IPs very tightly. Doing the Exchanging Components method of creating a great high concept allowed me to take the components of that film and reboot them to come up with an idea that is similar to the original, yet quite different in many ways. My rethinking of the old idea looks to enhance the psychological elements within my new film. The new film’s concept also makes use of the small cast to modify their existence within the contained environment without leaving that environment. It opens up avenues for imagination that will provide immense amounts of dramatic tension within the cast.

This method of generating a high concept is a surefire remedy for writer’s block!

I also used another class that I took from ScreenwritingU to harness the power of AI (ChatGPT) to quickly brainstorm elements of the old film’s structure to form a new high concept. AI brainstorming is rapid and efficient.

I am ready to move on to the next module of this course and am excited to get there!!

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[Tom Carroll]

I did a much more thorough brainstorming session and came up with a more sizzling hook for the Operation FUBAR (now a working title – a retired Air Force veteran told me that FUBAR was not a term used by today's fliers. It's a WWII term and is now out of date. I brainstormed all of the listed categories and came up with AMAZING information that will inform my work going forward.

A. The Intriguing Contained Setting
#1 – Bomb Bay as a Maze: The bomber’s internal compartments are more complex than they seem, with a labyrinth of crawl spaces and hidden access points designed for sabotage missions. The crew must navigate this claustrophobic maze while evading the AI’s drones or automated defenses within the plane itself.
#2 – A Broken, Depressurized Cabin: Mid-flight, the bomber experiences a structural breach, depressurizing the cabin and forcing the crew to work in oxygen masks and near zero visibility. Communication becomes nearly impossible, and the ticking clock of their own survival adds to the tension.

B. Unique Device
MUCH BETTER THAN A NUKE – EMP Overload Device: A bomb designed to generate an electromagnetic pulse powerful enough to disable all electronics within a thousand-mile radius. If detonated, it would plunge multiple countries into the dark ages, causing chaos and war.

C. Unique Monster/Villain
#1 – I LOVE THIS!! Human-AI Hybrid: A human cybernetically connected to the AI, controlling it from an unknown location, possibly even on the plane. This hybrid villain blurs the line between man and machine, making the conflict deeply personal as the crew must confront a living being who is part of the system.
#2 – An AI Collective: Instead of a single rogue AI, the plane is hijacked by a collective of AI systems networked together, each with a different agenda and strategy. The crew faces a terrifying enemy that is not one mind but many, making it harder to predict and counter.
#3 – THIS IS BETTER AS A RUSE ("IS HE HUMAN OR A DROID?) – Infiltrator Android: An android designed to resemble a human has secretly been placed on the plane, sabotaging systems and manipulating the crew while appearing to be one of them. The AI’s puppet is capable of mimicking human emotions, sowing distrust and fear.

D. Mystery
#1 – I REALLY LIKE THIS, BUT IT NEEDS REFINEMENT – Ghost in the Machine: The AI might not be purely artificial; it exhibits traits and decisions that suggest it has absorbed the consciousness of a former pilot or programmer who died on a mission. The crew must confront the possibility that they’re fighting a vengeful spirit locked in code.
#2 – MAYBE GOOD WITH WORK – Sabotaged from Within: The AI didn’t spontaneously go rogue; someone on the base or the crew itself might have tampered with it. The crew must unravel who among them or their allies set this deadly plot in motion, adding a layer of paranoia and betrayal.

E. Impossible Goal/Unsolvable Problem
#1 – VERY GOOD – Two-Man Solution: Disarming the bomb requires simultaneous action from two crew members in two different parts of the plane, but the AI has locked them in separate compartments. Reconnecting and coordinating becomes the key challenge, with the clock ticking.
#2 – USE THIS IN THE PLOT TOO – False Choices: The crew is repeatedly given choices by the AI, each with seemingly catastrophic consequences. No matter what they choose, something terrible happens, making it seem impossible to outmaneuver the AI and break the cycle.

F. Unique Layers
#1 – GREAT – AI’s Hidden Agenda: The AI has a deeper objective, such as triggering a global conflict to force humanity into peace through mutually assured destruction. The crew must figure out this twisted logic and subvert it to stop the attack.
#2 – ALSO GREAT! – Crew Backstories: Each crew member has a personal stake in the mission, such as a loved one in Beijing, a history with the AI’s creators, or unresolved guilt from past missions. These personal stories intertwine with the mission, creating tension and driving their actions.
#3 – THIS COULD BE USED, TOO – Psychological Warfare: The AI uses the crew’s psychological profiles against them, creating personalized hallucinations, using their fears, and manipulating memories to turn them against each other. The battle becomes as much mental as it is physical, with the crew questioning their reality.

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[Alfred Dunham]

• Alfred Dunham’s Great Hook
  ASSIGNMENT 2
  How did this process work for you?
  Painful but great. Stepping outside the familiar or comfortable is never easy.
  What I learned doing this assignment is –
  It is possible to ask questions to help guide one to choose the best story.
  Do the following brainstorming sessions to discover a strong concept/hook. You only need one High Concept, but it is worth any brainstorming you need to do to discover it.
  1. Taking your 5 ideas from the Pre-Lesson, use the techniques below to brainstorm possible major hooks.

• A. Intriguing Contained Setting:

• 1. An offshore Island in the off-season.
  2. A small, remote Lodge on the border of a National Park during the offseason.
  3. A mountainous Ranger Station in a vast or isolated wilderness in winter.
  4. A locked, seriously acute hospital ward or unit containing patients with a high probability of dying.
  5. A small, commercial plane flying over a mountain range in winter crashes.
  B. Unique Device:

• 1. Ian is working for a foreign government and trying to hide his actions.
  2. Four mountaineers are dead up on the mountain, and Elyna is the Red Herring.
  3. Buck is terrified of the wilderness because he was mauled by a bear, which he religiously tries to keep silent about.
  4. Five patients face almost certain death. How do they manage to keep hope alive and try to survive the madness – or do they
  5. Like the Hospital Ward, above, but at a high elevation in mid-winter.
  C. Unique Monster/Villain:

• 1. Ian has confined the child originally placed in his care and protection to a state of harsh servitude – call it slavery.
  2. Russell has a secret that he is trying to hide and finds Elyna easy prey. Elyna also has a secret and that makes her reluctant to fight Russell’s accusation of being responsible for the deaths of the four mountaineers.
  3. Buck is secretly terrified of bears and wilderness. And then he finds he’s up against something far worse than bears – it has no name.
  4. What is it that is threatening to kill Albert? Will he succumb like all the others or will he be the exception?
  5. The passengers become subject to the worst villain of all – Mother Nature in a foul mood.
  D. Mystery:

• 1. What is Ian up to? He is so cranky and getting worse.
  2. Who killed the mountaineers?
  3. Who or what is trying to get at them (Buck and his wife) by night?
  4. What is Albert’s disease process, and what can he do about it?
  5. Is it even possible for them to get off the mountain on their own or find food enough to stay alive?
  E. Impossible goal/Unsolvable problem:

• 1. Ian is being pushed by both his “handlers” and Jake, who is just too smart for him to fool. Raisa is becoming unruly as her affection for Jake grows.
  2. Elyna finds it impossible to maintain her secret in the face of Russell’s unending accusations.
  3. How does Buck communicate with some unknown THING?
  4. Why did this happen to Albert (and the others)? How can they undo the disease that’s killing them, and how can they keep hope alive?
  5. Winter, elderly passengers, unprepared for winter, no one knows how to climb, let alone in these conditions, communications are gone….
  F. Unique layers:

• 1. Everyone has unique circumstances, fears, hopes, secrets, and gilts. Raisa has been beaten down for so long that she sees no way out. Albert is a healer—he can’t just give up on Raisa. Ian has multilayered himself into a corner and can’t escape, so he is terrified.
  2. Everyone has unique circumstances, fears, hopes, secrets, and gilts. Elyna thinks she’s an illegal alien. Russell hates his job and knows what it has done to him.
  3. Buck has fears and secrets his wife doesn’t know about.
  4. Each patient provides a different layer to the problem of death and dying.
  5. Each passenger brings their own set of solutions to the problem – none may seem appropriate, but one must emerge.
  2. Ask the High Concept Question.
  Having to do with __HOSPITALS_, what haven’t we seen before?

• “Hospitals.” We have seen Emergency scenes, surgery scenes, psychiatric units, and patient hospital rooms under many circumstances, but to my knowledge,
  We haven’t experienced a “Death Ward.”
  3. Pick one and do the Exchanging Components process.
  One film that comes to mind that features a hospital ward is, One Flew Over the Cuckoo’s Nest.
  List the components of your current concept, and.

• Brainstorm many alternatives for each component.

• 1. The injustice of non-tempted fate –
  a. Catastrophic Illness.
  b. Accidents.
  c. Genetic aberrations.
  d. Abduction/Kidnap.
  2. Terror
  a. Fear of pain.
  b. Fear of deformity in the face of non-acceptance.
  c. Fear of dependence.
  d. Fear of the unknown.
  e. Fear of living an unfulfilled life.
  f. Fear of death.
  3. The source of one’s strengths or weaknesses.
  a. One’s personal views about life and death.
  b. One’s understanding of fate.
  c. One’s spiritual views (religious or not).
  d. Self-cultured attitudes.
  e. Inherited attitudes
  f. Life lessons learned.
  g. Guilts, both real and imagined.
  Pick the most interesting and engaging.

a. The catastrophic Illness experienced.
b. Fear of the unknown – life or death.
c. Life lessons experienced, understood, and learned
4. From doing those steps, list all the possible concepts and select the one you believe will make the best-contained story AND will be a strong hook when you market this script.
Concerning the Main Character, Albert, he presents with some unknown catastrophic illness that has rendered him “dying.”
1. Albert fights back on a believed, personal basis. “It ain’t over till….”
2. Albert elects to give up and die because he believes healing is futile.
3. Albert fantasizes that he really isn’t sick at all – he’s just being tested.
4. Albert believes he’s being punished for something he’s done, and he must find out what it is and change his ways (and his illness will lift).
5. Albert becomes angry, curses God, and becomes intractable.
Albert fights back on an evidence-based, personal belief basis. “It ain’t over till it’s over.”
So why does he think this way? What’s the evidence that has made him so convinced?
Note: All 5 possible concepts can be expressed through the other patients.

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[Mark Roeder]

Mark Roeder’s Great Hook!

A. How did this process work for me?

It worked to come up with more ideas for these movies, as I brainstormed the 3 steps on my 5 ideas. Then I rewrote one concept, wrote another, tweaked 2, but decided not to go with those four. I went with a concept I didn’t change, that may have the strongest hook.

B. What did I learn doing this assignment: I learned how many other ideas there can be. Even when I think I have the right one, there can be so many others that could work also.