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Kathy’s Marketable Components
What I learned doing this assignment is how elevate my pitch to make it better.
Logline: A young naive woman who believes in the power in love, falls in love with an older sophisticated man who works in Saudi Arabia. After marrying him and moving there with him she soon learns that she must stand up to both of them and fight for what she believes in.
Components that I have already:
1. It’s a true story.
2. Title
3. Timely
I’m going to try to change and add things to make it more marketable.
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George Schwimmer’s Marketable Components
What I learned doing this assignment is that, as always, I was forced to isolate marketing elements in order to examine and improve each of them, as well as understand what those elements are. Also learned to put into words things implied in the screenplay.
Title: Time Tracker
Logline: A falsely discharged CIA agent time travels to catch his parents’ killers and stop a political assassination, aided by a hip young Black Merlin the Magician, a love interest and three street kids, as the agent, in turn, is hunted by the vicious killers.
Marketable Components:
Wide audience appeal: Has an adult male hero, comic male side-kick, female love
interest, three street kids, thriller elements and a detective-style
mystery to solvePitch: This is a four-quadrant movie, appealing to all—a potential summer blockbuster.
Similarity to a box-office
success: Back to the Future meets 48 Hrs. Time travel, bad guys to stop, and a buddy-type of
relationship that bounces between the lead and supporting characters.Pitch: Elements and relationships in this screenplay mirror those found in Back to the Future and 48 hrs., notably humor, action, fantasy, Magical Realism. A possible tentpole film and franchise property.
Great roles for a bankable
actor—and for a rising star: The dynamics—including comedy and action—between
the lead character (Adam) and supporting character (Merlin) are quite similar
to that of Jack Cates (Nick Nolte) and Reggie Hammond (Eddie
Murphy) in 48
Hrs. Great characters for actors to play.Pitch: Personalities and relationships found in this screenplay mirror similar ones found in other—highly successful—movies, like Back to the Future and 48 Hrs.
Adam Kingston is the Indiana Jones of time travel.
Elevate: Make character and his lines more interesting in some way. Be amenable and accommodating to the needs expressed by the film’s star. Dig deeper into the psyche of the lead character. As a franchise property, Time Tracker can earn the star a lot of money and renown.
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VIC VALLEAU MARKETABLE COMPONENTS/ POWER PLAYERS 4/12/23
WHAT I LEARNED: I love to do marketing writeups but lacking confidence, don’t follow through.
LOG LINE A flop at dating and am embarrassment as a sperm donor, Bob is homeless unless he gets recognition as a father by his 40<sup>th</sup> birthday.
A. Unique setting.A unique look
at human reproductive technology to humorously asks the question “Are men
necessary?”
B. Great Title, similar to Who’s your daddy but without sexist
overtones. .
C. True.Inspired by true events
from newspaper, repeated on internet.
D. Timely.Artifical
insemination is widely used in today’s Western world..
E. It’s a first comedy treatment
about a serious subject.Independent single woman choosing sperm donors over husbands is more popular than ever. A timely comedic film treatment finds humor in this universal, yet deeply personal choice, Is this an admission of failure, she can’t find a man, or independence, that she doesn’t need a breadwinner.
F. Ultimate
G. Wide audience appeal This topic touches many lives personally.
H. Adapted from a popular book.
I. Similarity to a box-office success.
J. A great role for a bankable actor My (unnamed) friend.
3. Elevate/ emphasize role/components
PITCH I COULD USE
G: START WITH WIDE AUDIENCE APPEAL BABIES AND SINGLE MOTHERS ARE WIDELY POPULAR AND UNIQUE.
E: COMEDY TREATMENT THAT LIGHTENS UP A DEEPLY HUMAN CONCERN, AND THIS MAY BE A FIRST.
Independent single woman choosing sperm donors over husbands. r. Is this an admission of failure, she can’t find a man, or independence, that she doesn’t need a breadwinner.
Controversial subject like Dallas Buyers Club, Truman show startling peek into others intimate reality.
Timely- connected to some major trend or event.
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Peter Saltzman’s Marketable Components
LOGLINE: When the grocery store that is their entire universe begins to fade into non-existence, the self-absorbed inhabitants must work together to find their way to the larger world before their world is gone for good.
Component 1: Timely
The show incorporates timely themes of radical climate change and equally radical advanced AI. Those themes were far more explicit in the original season one (now season 2 with modifications.) However, the new, contained opening season retains those themes, even if somewhat couched in metaphorical imagery (which could make it more attractive?) The question I have (for myself) is how to bake that into the pitch without, well, delivering a book report. I have already eluded the climate change theme in my concept. Perhaps with a few choice words, I can build in the AI element, e.g., “It’s the store with ‘everything and more’, a place that knows what you want before you do.” OK, it’s already getting to long and wordy. Back to the drawing board…Component 2: ULTIMATE
The show is extremely weird (but in an accessible and humorous way.)
- The universe is the size of the grocery store and its parking lot;
- The broken parking lot has no cars, just glass pods where people go to sleep and make love;
- The same parking lot is the scene of random and quickly fluctuating mega-weather events;
- Dialogue is randomly sung or rapped.
- Its inhabitants are extremely self-absorbed, e.g., Jacob, the pianist in the piano bar, refuses requests, preferring to play only his own oddball improvisations. In fact, the central narrative of <i style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>The Bubble is how each character must break out of his or her own bubble so they can work together for the common good—and break out of their bubble universe. <i style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Again: How to pitch this without making it a damn book report.
What I learned: That I still need to fine tune the concept.
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Lindy Baker’s Marketable Components
What I learned doing this assignment is the importance of knowing the ten Components of Marketability to create a pitch that makes a producer know that s/he can sell it, that it is marketable.
Logline: This is inspired by my own true story. A psychic woman in the middle of an identity crisis accepts the plea of a distressed woman to find her missing 6-year-old great niece. She becomes the stalked when she discovers a series of abductions are connected and accidentally uncovers major evidence of a child pornography ring.
1.) Unique/High Concept – This story is unique because of its storyline and subtext.
A majority of movies about psychics depict them as superpowers or evil doers. This script shows the psychic as a feeling, normal person. She’s born this way, and her abilities cause conflicts to being able to fit in with others. Why have these visions if you cannot stop the event? She is working toward answering what is the value of it for herself. She is not what most people expect as a psychic. It’s also different as to how the clues unravel in a way that the audience is kept guessing as to where the missing child is and who did it.
2.) True – As a person born clairvoyant (psychic), having been asked to assist some Southern California homicide departments with their investigations and also asked by family members of missing children, this is a story based on one of my cases.
3.) To elevate these two components, I would include my experience and qualifications as a psychic and my certifications/education, along with the fact that I have been in business full time since 1994.
My accolades include:
– Public Service Award by the Stark County Prosecutor’s Office for my part in establishing the 1<sup>st</sup> Victim Witness Assistance Program in the U.S. I volunteered as a Rape & Assault counselor.
– Astroblog column in Fun & Fit Life magazine Las Vegas, Nevada (10 years)
– Named one of the Top 10 Psychics in the US by Globe Magazine
– Named Favorite Psychic Medium by readers of About.com
– Certified in Timeline Therapy, Clinical Hypnotherapy, Medical Hypnotherapy Specialist, and as an Emotion Code Practitioner.
– M.Ed. – Cross Cultural Teaching
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Lindy Baker’s Marketable Components
What I learned doing this assignment is the importance of knowing the ten Components of Marketability to create a pitch that makes a producer know that s/he can sell it, that it is marketable.
Logline:
This is inspired by my own true story. A psychic woman in the middle of an identity crisis accepts the plea of a distressed woman to find her missing 6-year-old great niece. She becomes the stalked when she discovers a series of abductions are connected and accidentally uncovers major evidence of a child pornography ring.
1.) Unique/High Concept – This story is unique because of its storyline and subtext.
A majority of movies about psychics depict them as superpowers or evil doers. This script shows the psychic as a feeling, normal person. She’s born this way, and her abilities cause conflicts to being able to fit in with others. Why have these visions if you cannot stop the event? She is working toward answering what is the value of it for herself. She is not what most people expect as a psychic. It’s also different as to how the clues unravel in a way that the audience is kept guessing as to where the missing child is and who did it.
2.) True – As a person born clairvoyant (psychic), having been asked to assist some Southern California homicide departments with their investigations and also asked by family members of missing children, this is a story based on one of my cases.
3.) To elevate these two components, I would include my experience and qualifications as a psychic and my certifications/education, along with the fact that I have been in business full time since 1994.
My accolades include:
– Public Service Award by the Stark County Prosecutor’s Office for my part in establishing the 1<sup>st</sup> Victim Witness Assistance Program in the U.S. I volunteered as a Rape & Assault counselor.
– Astroblog column in Fun & Fit Life magazine Las Vegas, Nevada (10 years)
– Named one of the Top 10 Psychics in the US by Globe Magazine
– Named Favorite Psychic Medium by readers of About.com |– Certified in Timeline Therapy, Clinical Hypnotherapy, Medical Hypnotherapy Specialist, and as an Emotion Code Practitioner.
– M.Ed. – Cross Cultural Teaching
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Jon C. Scheide Marketable Components
“What I learned doing this assignment is”… process. Go through the steps, one by one, answer the questions. It’s amazing what you will discover.
Current Logline.
When a former cop turned private detective gets entangled with the supermodel wife of a corrupt and abusive football player he quickly learns there’s more than at stake than just a celebrity divorce as local gangsters and dirty cops try to stop her from disappearing.
2. Pick one or two Components of Marketability that have the most potential for selling this script.
A. Unique N/A
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B. Great Title: “Off The Grid” Modern, Punchy, alludes to what many people fantasize about… walking away and starting over.
C. True. N/A
D. Timely: Yes, in that it does deal with modern times, lack of privacy, internet tracking, spousal abuse.
E. It’s a first N/A
F. Ultimate N/A
G. Wide audience appeal: Yes, Good action, tight thriller plot
H. Adapted from a popular book N/A
I. Similarity to a box-office success: Yes. In the vein of Drive, or Prisoners
J. A great role for a bankable actor.
Marty: Smart, quick-witted and heroic lead
Claire: Strong willed, self-sufficient and capable co-lead
Erica: Marty’s whip smart “Girl Friday” who ends up taking over the company.
Uncle Kevin: Great Older Male cameo; family patriarch who is also corrupt cop
3. Ways to elevate those two components for this script and tell us how you might pitch the script through the two components.
I would lean into the timely aspects of the plot. The search for privacy and security, the un-acceptable and often un-reported crime of spousal abuse, especially when ‘condoned’ in a minsogynst culture. Then I would point to the two lead characters, written with sharp humor, a la classic noir films, who are ultimately attracted to each other because they are smart, independent and willing to commit 100% (which is what it requires if one goes Off The Grid).
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Tom’s Marketable Components
What I learned doing this is that I have much better ways to pitch this story.
Title: A New Years Wish
Logline : A young go-getter is in such a hurry for success, he jumps forward a year in one night, and has to master the four immeasurable virtues to stay present and live in the moment, or his life will pass him by.
2. Look through the 10 Components of Marketability and pick one or two that have the most potential for selling this script.
• G. Wide audience appeal. It’s the human condition to examine your life on New Years Eve and hope you will be in a better place this time next year.
• J. A great role for a bankable actor.
G. Wide audience appeal: Most people examine their life on New Years Eve and imagine they will be in a better place this time next year. Theme is part of the human condition.
J. Great Role: A journey from blind ambition to peace and serenity. He must learn how to stay present or his life will actually pass him by.
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Camilla’s marketable content.
This is for a TV series – 5 season potential.
Log-line: After surviving the hell of World War I, two Jewish blood brothers navigate a New York full of racial divide and hatred of the migrant Jewish community, dangerously testing the local crime boss, corrupt law enforcers, forbidden love and their faith.
A. Unique. Not sure about this – but here’re my
notes: First time a TV series devoted to Jewish gangsters, showing them as
they were – and at a young age (lead characters are between 17 and 23 in
pilot). The story focus previously unexplored aspects of crime in the 20s
and 30s such as labour racketeering, the ceremonial wine exemption to
Prohibition, prostitution, heroin peddling, alcohol smuggling involving
the French speaking, poor minority in upstate New York State and US “alcohol tourism” became a source of
income and irritation in Canada. The life of the mothers, wives and daughters working
in the garment industry will also be depicted. Like Mad Men, it will also follow the characters reactions to changes in US society throughout the 20th Century – 20s, 30s, 40s and, 50s, 60s, 70s etc.B. Great Title: Not Sure – while Red does refer to the
themes: love, blood and the socialists active in unions in the 20s and 30s
and witch hunt for lefties in the 40s and 50s, it’s also the nick-name of
the lead protagonist.C. True story: I’ve done much research on
the world, the plot and the characters. All is based on combinations of documentary
stories in the public domain. I’ve pulled from New York Times articles from
the 10s, 20s and 30s, published research (contemporary and from the
period), published books (including biographies). Most of the characters
existed in this world and did in real life what they do in the story. In
the gangster world, there’s also lots of published lore, which I’ve tried
to avoid.D. Timely — connected to some major trend
or event: it is an
historical piece but its themes are relevant today: crime wave, antisemitism,
mass immigration, police brutality, graft, discrimination, injustice, the
death penalty, polarisation, poor working conditions, powerless women, unions
and a deep financial crisis. Prohibition – “the Great Experiment” is a
sample of how young, powerless immigrants that do not share the moral code
of white Presbyterians reacts to moral codes imposed through federal and
state laws that also opens doors to enormous riches.E. It’s a first: The World War I backdrop has been
depicted before, but not the first US tank battalion where our
protagonists serve. The first women only Police Precinct
in New York – focussing on missing persons, child delinquents and prostitution
will also be depicted in the series.F. Ultimate. N/A
G. Wide audience appeal: action,
romance, the little guy against Goliath. Teenagers of today experiencing
the struggles and wild things their great grand parents did when young
(and didn’t tell them about). Family traumas. The old generation will
remember and middle aged people will find supporting characters (parents) struggling
with the same problems then they do now.I. Similarity to a box-office success: Boardwalk
Empire, Peaky Blinders, Sopranos, the Godfather, Once Upon a Time in
America, Goodfellas, the Departed, Black Mass, Casino. For the link to changes is society with the Mad Men.J. A great role for a bankable actor: In gangster
stories that also focus in the relationships gangsters have – like the
Sopranos – you find some of the most complex and multi-dimensional
characters in TV. In Red, the lead is a devoted Jew with a family and two
daughters and also a hitman for hire, a labour racketeer, a rumrunner and he
runs a company that posts fraudulent bonds. The female lead has been
brought up strictly and conservatively, marries a man she knows is a
criminal and becomes actively involved in the union’s fight for better
working conditions. The family will struggle with the shame and taboo
around mental illness and parenthood. There will be deep inner conflicts
and “gun-at-your head” high stakes! Young, up-and-coming actors who seeks
to play challenging and complex characters grippling with challenging
themes that a modern audience can relate to may be interested. Potential
actors/actresses: Anya Taylor-Joy and Zendaya and Timothee Chalamet, Nicolas
Hoult or Jonathan Groff. There are also interesting supporting roles for
seasoned actors. The mothers of the female lead and the protagonist are
formidable, complex characters!H. Adapted from a popular book. N/A.
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What I learned today is how to highlight elements of a pitch.
LOGLINE: A brash young Black detective and his older Jewish partner race against the clock to stop a neo-Nazi group from launching a terrorist event meant to start a race war across America.
D. Timely: Between recent Nazi marches and sedititous attacks against our democracy, I believe audiences would love to see action heroes taking these people down.
J. Great roles for bankable actors: a team not unlike Mel Gibson & Danny Glover in LETHAL WEAPON or Brad Pitt & Morgan Freeman in SE7EN. Also memorable antagonists.
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SaM’s marketable components
Logline: Two activist young adults start an environmental movement and find they have evolving supernatural powers to complete their goals.
A. Unique: do-gooders, animal communicators, bi-locators use skills to promote environmentalism
B. Great Title. To Be Frank
C. True. YES based on a true story
D. Timely. Maybe
G. Wide audience appeal.
J. A great role for a bankable actor. think Russell Brand
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Jalynn’s Marketable Components
What I learned doing this assignment is this screenplay actually has five of the 10 Components of Marketability.
“Heart of a Mustang” Logline: A judge sends a juvenile delinquent to Promise Ranch for troubled boys where he bonds with a wild horse and an old cowboy, and in doing so, rediscovers his true self.
Wide audience appeal: Focuses on a smart 15-year-old who gets into trouble for the first time and is sent to Promise Ranch for six months. An older cowboy teaches him how to bond with a mustang, then how to gentle and train that horse to be ridden. The boy learns important life lessons as he falls for a horse, then later for a girl.
I can pitch this as a great story for a teenaged heartthrob and an attractive aging cowboy actor that really falls into the four-quadrant movie range of audience appeal for both male and female, plus over and under 25.
Great roles for two bankable actors: A teenage heartthrob and an aging well-loved actor.
I can pitch the roles referring to a “Shawn Mendes (Pop Singer)-type teen heartthrob” and a “Dennis Quaid, Mark Harmon or Kevin Costner cowboy.”
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Morine Perry’s Marketable Components
What I learned doing this assignment is how to make my pitch stronger. I also learned my script has potential, but as is it may lack a strong business marketability. I can fix that however and I am excited to be on that journey creating a marketable script.
Current Logline: When he finds out his estranged son only has two months to live, a guilt-ridden control freak embarks on a quest to make up lost time.
Components of Marketability:
· True – This story is inspired by true events which I have rights to.
· Great role for a bankable actor. I believe that with more development the main characters will appeal to actors, especially the adult son who has a pure childlike, but in your face personality.
· Wide Audience Appeal – It captures the universal needs of belonging, reconciliation, and forgiveness. In light of the high rate of suicide and loneliness, I will really capitalize on the idea of desolation with a spark of hope.
I think I will focus more on the last two marketable components. I need to do some re-writing to raise it up, but it is very doable.
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Marketability of ‘Underwater Hazards’ An Animated (or not) Horror Fantasy.
It was initially written to have actors, but I sent it out for several high-end professional script coverage services and they all said “This has to be Animated”
Searching for a missing friend, an eco-friendly young girl swims into the lair of a Mutant Merman Wizard, handicapped from Ocean Pollution.
WIDE AUDIENCE FOR THE ENTIRE FAMILY
SOCIALLY RELEVANT
HAS WON 14 IMDb Film Festivals including several table reads.
GREAT CHARACTERS
EXCITING VISUAL EFFECTS (Two searchers for the kids fall into an underground tunnel that starts to spin and creates frightening noises and special effects (Like a Futuristic Haunted House).
GREAT TITLE – UNDERWATER HAZARDS
Several reviews compared the story to “The Nightmare Before Christmas” and “The Cabinet of Dr. Caligari”
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Lee Skore’s Marketable Components
4 — What I learned:
Having strong components and knowing how to empahasize them is important.
1 — Current logline:
Her recurring nightmares are repressed memories of her parents’ horrific murders and now someone wants to kill her too, but she survives only if she discovers the mystery of her past.
2 — Marketable components:
B. Great title — Telling Lies.
J. Great roles for bankable actors — (a) Dakota Fanning or someone like her (b) someone similar to Chris Pine.
3 — Brainstorm/elevate:
Telling Lies: (a) it’s obvious to the audience one character is lying to another character (b) the audience notices discrepancies in the story that lead to unexpected outcomes.
Bankable actors: 2 main characters and love interests: (a) late-20s female character is the main protagonist (b) mid-30s male actor is the 2nd protagonist.
The title is a play on words. This story has two protagonists who work together to solve the mystery.
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Rita’s Marketable Components
What I learned doing this assignment:
- I’m learning the bankable parts but don’t really know how to sell them. Yet.
- Creating business ideas about how to make it more sellable is fun.
- The most useful approach to finding marketable pieces of my story.
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LOGLINE:
To impress a handsome contractor, a lonely psychology professor pretends to own a painting company but what she and her ramshackle crew deliver gives a whole new meaning to “home improvement.”
B. Great Title — Maybe if I change it to BLUE MOON which I am considering.
C. True – Inspired by my own experiences.
G. Wide audience appeal. – Main character is a woman but she’s in a man’s world of construction. Most of the characters are men. Age range of characters is college to senior citizens.
I. Similarity to a box-office success. — There are some elements of You’ve Got Mail — misunderstanding, antagonism, business, female vs male business.
J. A great role for a bankable actor. — I plan to increase this potential in a rewrite.
Some ideas to present:
C. True — I need to research this more but I have the idea of expanding my painting company to be something like painterbros.com except that my company name will be familiarized and distributed through a popular movie and encourage female ownership (with the prospect of working within a large dating pool).</div>
G. Wide audience appeal — It’s a full family/work/life balance story.Romance, business, comedy, life improvements, college kids make life decisions, parent/adult child issues resolved. Age range of characters is college to senior citizens.
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What I learned: I know next to nothing about marketing. In addition, as soon as I tried brainstorming the list on marketability, the story demanded change. No issue. I haven’t started the second draft yet. And that’s a good thing.
Genre: RomCom
Logline: A popular podcaster overloaded with social phobias grabs the interest of a confident and outspoken public speaker who needs his help.
First marketable component, the title: Everybody’s Phobic (and then there’s me)
How to present the title:
I’ll suggest that the title should spike interest in a similar way as that of Anger Management.
Second marketable component is widespread appeal.
How to present widespread appeal:
Boy and girl meet, they separate, they unite is a popular emotional roller coaster in romantic comedy.
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Dave’s Marketable Components
What I learned from this exercise is that I now have a much better understanding of what elements producer look at when deciding whether to request a script.
Fifty years in the future, a young English lawyer must travel overland across an America divided into independent states to rescue his wife, a journalist sentenced to death in a military state.
Unique: The story takes place 50 years in the future, the U.S. has divided into independent states based on identity (Native-American state), livelihood (a business state), or political outlook (environmental state). The states along the east coast have closed their airspace to foreign carriers, so they must begin the journey overland. Their experience differs markedly in the different states they pass through, depending on that state’s identify.
Wide audience appeal: There is a lot of adventure, as they have a number of narrow escapes while crossing the continent, and freeing the woman from prison is a difficult task. There is also romance, as the husband’s love for his wife motivates him to go through every obstacle to try to reach her. There is also good buddy chemistry between the husband and his best friend, who volunteers to go on the journey with him.
Pitch based on Unique: The country has divided into a series of independent states based on identity, livelihood or political outlook. Each state presents different challenges to the pair, which result from its unique identity.
Wide audience appeal pitch: The husband and wife are young (25) and in love, which is evident in all their communications and in the husband’s determination to rescue her. There is a great deal of adventure, as they have to negotiate a number of attempts on their lives that are orchestrated by the head prison warden of the state where the wife is being held. The husband and his friend share good chemistry as they confront these challenges.
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Jani’s Marketable Components
1. Logline: A woman with mild autism, teams up with a wannabe vigilante with a dark past, who teaches her to let go of her fears.
2. The two selling points that will hook a producer:
a. I feel that LIVE FOREVER is a great title. When I pitched it to producers in MSC 16, they really liked the title. That gave me hope that I was on the right track.
b. I believe it also offers a great role for bankable actors.
3. What I Brainstormed:
a. At first, I was stuck on the title, BECKY AND JOE. I realized that it wasn’t a marketable title so I had to do some heavy duty brainstorming to find something that’s unique and will also attract producers. I finally came up with LIVE FOREVER.
b. An actor would love to play, Becky. It’s a unique role that would probably get them some recognition since it deals with the daily challenges an autistic person faces.
4. What I Learned:
Audiences crave conflict. They love to connect with characters that have lots of flaws instead of watching characters who live “inside the box”, in their own boring world.
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Michael L Harris – Marketable Concepts
What I learned doing this assignment is… that a successful pitch is one which is focused on the Producer/ Actor or Manager’s needs (i.e. the salability of the project) and not telling the story. ?”
Current Logline: To solve the mystery of his mom’s disappearance a young visionary must convince his new foster mother that his visions are real.
Components of Marketability / How I would use them to elevate my pitch:
Great Title: “Simon Sees” is the story of a young who sees visions of past secrets and future dangers. (The title speaks for itself)
Wide Audience Appeal: “Simon Sees” is a thriller about a young boy who sees the secrets of the past and dangers of the future. (Popular Thriller genre.)
Adapted from a book by a popular author: “Simon Sees” is based on a novel by best-selling author, Othello Bach.
Similarity to a box-office success: “Simon Sees” is the next “sixth Sense.”
A great role for a bankable actor: “Simon Sees” has a great role for Morgan Freeman.
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Jeri’s Marketable Components
1. Current logline: When Santa’s elves go on a labor strike days before Christmas the head elf must prove that humans don’t suck, but he has to prove it to himself first.
2. I believe the two components that have the most potential for selling this script are the title, ELVES ON STRIKE, and the wide audience appeal.
3. The title says it all, the elves are going on strike. The story will have wide appeal because (almost) everyone likes Christmas movies. People look forward to watching the same movies, so there’s already a built-in audience year after year. The fish out of water element, the elves go to New York City to see people and convince themselves that their lives’ purpose, to make children happy, is worthwhile. So it will appeal to kids because we follow elves and see them interacting with children, and adults will be entertained because we will see working conditions in the North Pole as well as follow the elves on their journey through the city, with the beauty of the season as a backdrop.
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