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Lesson 20
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SUBJECT: Mark Napier’s Completed Act 3
What did I learn. I learned to increase my speed by focusing on the shell of the first draft versus focusing on trying to complete the draft with dialog that was taking up a great deal of my time. Now I have pretty much caught up to where I am suppose to be in the class it seems.
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BEAT SHEET: ACT 3 REACTION TO MID POINT:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
–Mark is now suicidal and devastated by the news of his diagnosis and it could not have come at a worse time with the Great Recession in full swing.
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
–After no employment for 10 months, Mark is feeling the pinch and cannot afford to fly up to his Army Reserve unit in Fort Dix, New Jersey for procedures to support a medical discharge.
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ACT 3:
ACT 3 REACTION TO MID POINT OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
BEGINNING: Mark is now suicidal and devastated by the news of his diagnosis and it could not have come at a worse time with the Great Recession in full swing. Blacklisted by the CIA, an outcast by the US Army and non deployable as all prospective employers would require one to be to support the intelligence community or military
MIDDLE: As news spreads among family and friends of Mark’s predicament, he finds he is discarded and forgotten and no longer wanted. It does not take long before Mark realizes that he feels his country too has turned its back on him.
END: Mark begins to fall into severe depression as there is no hope in sight. He fears losing all that he has worked for in 30 years and figuratively handed an epitaph that sums up his life at that point.
ACT 3:
ACT 3 REACTION TO MID POINT: DIALOG SCENE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
DESCRIPTION:
For Outstanding Service and Loyalty to Country
Stigmatized and Slandered
Betrayed and Dishonored
Impoverished and Homeless
Discarded and Forgotten
Blacklisted by a Grateful Nation
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ACT 3:
ACT 3 REACTION TO MID POINT OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
BEGINNING: After no employment for 10 months, Mark is feeling the pinch and cannot afford to fly up to his Army Reserve unit in Fort Dix, New Jersey for medical discharge procedure. Holding the rank of a US Army Major, Mark would normally be picked up at the Camden, NJ airport, but now he must walk 32 miles to the base and arrives to sleep on a park bench at 1:30 AM. A tree stands by the bench leaving Mark to wish he had a rope to hang himself.
MIDDLE: Mark feels everything is crashing down around him. He is constantly being harassed by creditors daily and called by the same company 5 times a day asking when they will get their money. Mark’s unit sends him for medical evaluations at Walter Reed Army Hospital’s Infectious Disease unit in Washington, DC, where he finds 30 other soldiers (both male and female) in attendance going through the similar ordeal of being discharged.
END: Mark tries to seek employment at various other commercial industries, but the growing recession is preventing him from securing a job even at McDonalds or even Walmart.
ACT 3:
ACT 3 REACTION TO MID POINT: DIALOG SCENE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
DESCRIPTION:
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ACT 3:
BEAT SHEET: ACT 3 MAKES A NEW PLAN:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
–Mark taps his retirement savings plans to generate revenue to sustain himself and cover the mortgage and utility bills, in addition to bartering personal property, short selling the house and dumbing down the resume to increase employment opportunities as a strategy to avoid failure.
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ACT 3:
ACT 3 MAKES A NEW PLAN: OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
BEGINNING: Mark begins to barter to pay off vacant land he owns in Colorado as a backup plan to move there using his household goods, a couple of vehicles and heavy machinery he bought to support his oldest brother’s business that no longer exists. Mark cashes in his US Government and Military savings plans to pay off as much debt and to carry him, until he secures employment.
MIDDLE: After sending out approximately 200 applications over the course of six months with no results, Mark tries a different approach on his resume by dumbing it down to appeal to employment opportunities one would find at Burger King, Walmart and Winn Dixie.
END: Mark attempts to put his house on the market for a short sale in an attempt to prevent his credit from being destroyed.
ACT 3:
ACT 3 MAKES A NEW PLAN: DIALOG SCENE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
DESCRIPTION:
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ACT 3:
BEAT SHEET: ACT 3 THINGS GO WELL, UNTIL…:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
–As the Great Recession grows worse and no hope for employment Mark soon depletes his savings, cannot pay utilities, nor buy food and worse yet the IRS files a nearly $500,000 civil suit for back taxes.
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ACT 3:
ACT 3 THINGS GO WELL, UNTIL… OUTLINE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
BEGINNING: As the Great Recession grows worse and no hope for employment Mark soon depletes his savings, cannot pay utilities, nor buy food.
MIDDLE: The IRS files a nearly $500,000 civil suit for back taxes Mark owes from the four years he spent in two combat zones for his country. Had he not had his luggage stolen by the CIA that contained his tax material, Mark had estimated he would have only owed $125,000. Now Mark is left without water and electricity for three months in a house he will lose.
END: The Internal Revenue Service reaches into Mark’s bank account and takes his last $600 shoving him and his small dog penniless into the streets.
ACT 3:
ACT 3 THINGS GO WELL, UNTIL…: DIALOG SCENE:
SLUG: INT–HOME, VIERA, FLORIDA–DAY
DESCRIPTION:
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ACT 3:
BEAT SHEET: ACT 3 PROTAGONIST FACES THEIR LOWEST LOW:
SLUG: EXT–STREETS OF MIAMI AND FORT LAUDERDALE, FLORIDA–DAY/NIGHT
–Mark soon finds himself homeless and joining in the ranks of the “Walking Dead.”
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ACT 3:
ACT 3 PROTAGONIST FACES THEIR LOWEST LOW: OUTLINE:
SLUG: EXT–STREETS OF MIAMI AND FORT LAUDERDALE, FLORIDA–DAY/NIGHT
BEGINNING: Mark soon finds himself homeless and joining in the ranks of the “Walking Dead” that will eventually consume 675,000 people. He is not just bankrupted financially, he is also bankrupted physically, mentally, spiritually and emotionally as he becomes an abandonment of self. Mark feels he is a complete failure in life and blames himself for not taking a more confrontational and aggressive proactive stance against COS Reilly.
MIDDLE: Mark begins to fall deeper into severe depression triggering PTSD, sleep insomnia, and is increasingly becoming more short tempered and violent. To hear people thank him for his service begins to anger him all because he stood up and did what was right and followed military leadership values. Now Mark finds himself having to become a strip dancer at gay bars to survive.
END: As Mark drops deeper into depression he begins planning his suicide to get out of his wretched misery.
ACT 3:
ACT 3 PROTAGONIST FACES THEIR LOWEST LOW: DIALOG SCENE:
SLUG: EXT–STREETS OF MIAMI AND FORT LAUDERDALE, FLORIDA–DAY/NIGHT
DESCRIPTION: Unbeknownst to Mark his transformational journey from a professional 20 year CIA and 26 year Army Reserves officer will lead to five years of chronic homelessness. The only way to put food in his hand for him and his dog is to strip dance at gay bars where he is at least not stigmatized and is accepted. Mark turns his weaknesses into opportunity for success to survive by having the advantage of looking 12 years younger than he is and has the core strength to pull off many of the stunts on the stripper pole that many “Twinkies” half his age cannot do. Mark also has his vast life experience to engage the customers beyond “I’m an Aries…What’s your sign?” butt nugget conversations. By day Mark and his dog wonder the streets homeless, but by night he sneaks his puppy in his backpack into the bars where he performs.
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Dr. Amador’s completed ACT 3:
***what i learned most about this assignment was that these scenes weren’t just random: the key senes really helped move my lead character from old ways to new ways until he hits his lowest of the low point and he questions was it worth it; he makes a return to his old ways of simple obedience and living with his head down for the sake of his daughter. his dream is on pause for now, but we shall see where act 4 brings him to completely shed his old ways and embrace the new ways no matter what!”
key scene 1: reaction/rethink is SOLID: he realizes after midpoint that his journey is not just personal but he’s doing it for all mankind!
Key scene 2: He makes a new plan and brings new ideas and pushes “mentor” General to help him once again: this time he’s the mentor reminding the general of his national obligation to his country !
Key scene 3: all is going to plan until the evil Rosinski throws wrench into their new plans; he shuts everything down for his own self-interest and monetary gain.
key scene 4: Turning point ending act three: lowest of the low: robert is basically in metaphorical “chains” as he has to do what rosinski tells him; if it were for him, he’s rather die than help, but he’s worried about his daughter’s future as an astronomer and/or being labeled as a traitor’s daughter.
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ASSIGNMENT #20
Finish Act 3: What I learned doing this assignment is that I want to infuse more humor in subsequent drafts but that just getting words on the page and completing the basic script is feeling really good.
1. Outline any scenes left for Act 3.
2. Write the outlined scenes.
3. Do a quick read of Act 3 and make whatever improvements you’d like.
4. Answer the question “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” and put it at the top of your work.
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Transformational Event C: Carla discovers incriminating evidence of cheating on Mark’s phone. She tells Harriet and Harriet insists she confront Mark.
Beginning: Carla arrives home and immediately hops in the shower after being in the ocean. Mark comes in from the gym and joins her in the shower!
Middle: Carla gets out of the shower since she was basically done when Mark joined her for some fun. In the bedroom she sees an incriminating text pop up on Mark’s phone.
End: Carla tells Harriet in the backyard and Harriet insists Carla confront Mark.
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Transformational Event D:Mark suggests couples therapy.
He’s been worried that Carla is depressed anyway.
Beginning: Carla goes back inside to the bedroom where Mark is dressing and confronts him about the text.
Middle: Mark confesses.
End: Mark suggests couples therapy. Carla concedes since she has been depressed.
Scene: Carla working on her portfolio and telling Mark the good news.
Scene: Carla asking the Moms for a ladies night out.
Scene: Transformational Event F
Transformational event F)Carla goes out again with the girls. This time the moms from school are there too. Carla drinks way to much, makes out with a 25yr old, gets thrown in the drunk tank and Mark has to bail her out. The next day there is a viral video of her coyote ugly bar top dancing and falling off with a nip slip. And Harriet is revealed to all to be imaginary–the reason the video is viral is partly because Carla is obviously talking to herself.
Beginning: It’s an official cell phone group chat organized by Carla ladies night out at The Bar! Bouncer Ron lets the ladies cut the line. Cute Bartender is super flirty with Carla. Drinks are being had and dancing is on!
Middle: It’s getting wild! The Moms are egging Carla on as she hops up on the bar and Coyote Ugly Style dances her heart out. Cute bartender gets up there too and they have a super hot kiss. Carla turns to Harriet on the bar top and tells her she’s the best! (it’s obvious Carla is talking to herself.) Carla grabs the water hose and sprays everyone in the bar maybe taking things a little too far. Bouncer Ron tries to get her down. SHe refuses and in trying to escape him “Harriet save me!” her tube top slips down revealing her boobs and she falls off the bar onto the floor.
End: Sorry Carla. Bouncer Ron escorts Carla out to the awaiting drunk tank.
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Lesson 20
Trish’s Completed Act 3 (2B)
What I learned doing this assignment is that only my villain has any personality. Plus I think every scene is a talking head scene. More things to fix in the next draft.
1. Outline any scenes left for Act 3.
Done in Final Draft.
2. Write the outlined scenes.
I did thorough outlines, so I will write the remaining scenes next go ‘round.
3. Do a quick read of Act 3 and make whatever improvements you’d like.
Done.
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