• Mary Albanese

    Member
    June 30, 2025 at 3:57 pm

    What I learned. Reveals are fun to set up.
    Elsa's reveal.
    Elsa and her husband want to have a baby. They are happily married and so much in love. She tries so hard tp have a baby but nothing works. She's constantly checking when would be the right time to conceive. (set up). After all of her efforts, one night when she feels would be the exact best time, she has a lovely romantic time with her husband and she conceives. Yay! (This is all the cover-up). But the doctor calls her in to discuss an urgent matter. Elsa and her husband go to see the doctor. The doctor kicks the husband out and must talk to Elsa alone. (demand). Elsa freaks out, begging the doctor to tell her what's the matter. Once the husband leaves the room, the doctor tells Else. He shows her the results of the blood tests he took. There it black and white it proves — The baby she is carrying can not possibly be her husband's child. (the reveal). Now Elsa has to discover what happened to her that this could possibly be true. Now everything has changed, and she will not stop until she gets to the bottom of this bizarre and frightening mystery.

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  • Jeremy Kirk

    Member
    June 30, 2025 at 8:11 pm

    Title: Jeremy Reveals

    What I learned doing this assignment was: Reveals are just part of good story telling. Every script should have some sort of reveal.

    Logline: Yuri has brought Sterling Waters to Vasili’s residence so that he may ask him to find his kidnapped daughter. Sterling asks some questions to get a feel for the man.
    • What do I want to hide from the reader for dramatic effect? In this scene what is being hidden is the fact that Vasili is really a werewolf. His tracking skills are an enhanced part of his change.
    • What are the characters hiding from each other? Vasili is hiding what his “true” abilities are, Yuri is hiding the fact that it’s the money from the job he really wants. Sterling is hiding that he set up an overwatch of snipers in the trees. However, Vasili knows they are there.
    • What is already known that would be more dramatic if hidden, then revealed? We know Vasili was in Russan military and something happened at Safd Kho that disgusts him. He makes mention of it, but it is not revealed until later as to why?
    • What would be the best/worst/most dramatic thing that could be revealed at this point? We subtly hint at the werewolf ability, but revealing it now would be the worst time.
    • Knowing this story, what could be under the surface that would create more drama for my characters? Perhaps more of Vasili’s unwillingness to go on the mission and become a wolf again? He is unhappy about it and he does owe Yuri for getting him out of Russia. But perhaps more drawn out misery about the choice?
    • Are there any deeper meanings to the things my character are saying and doing? Vasili does not hunt with guns or traps, obviously he hunts them with fang and claw, which he states, “I hunt them my own way.” The point at which I think Sterling wants to hire this man is when Vasili states that if he gets sick, “then I die.” If he is willing to die out here all alone, then he would be willing to die for his daughter.

    Demand: Sterling Waters proposes that Vasili find his kidnapped daughter. Yuri set up the meeting so that he may get a reward. Vasili is looking for redemption for the things he did in Russia.
    Cover-up: Only Yuri knows about Vasili nocturnal behaviors. It is hinted at through the script and you get the idea something is different about Vasili.
    Reveal: Once Vasili sets off after the kidnappers he is revealed through the changing into an actual wolf. That is mid-point in the script

    EXT. YUKON TERRITORY – MORNING
    An ax blade comes slicing down, chops a thick cord of wood in half in one stroke. VASILI VANYA (45) stands bare chested as snowflakes fall down on his shoulders. With a large red beard and strong solid arms, he sets up another block of wood for kindling.
    Out in the distance, on a snowy mound, a WHITE CLAD FIGURE crawls with a cloth wrapped rifle. He takes position and peers down the scope.
    At the edge of the woods a SECOND WHITE CLAD FIGURE kneels down with a rifle to the shoulder and takes aim.
    Vasili raises the ax, when a puddle jumper SCREAMS out from the low hanging clouds and circles overhead.
    He flings the ax into the wood and stands watching.
    The door to the small plane breaches and out step two men in overcoats with machine guns hanging across their chest.
    Next, a man in a large fur coat followed by another small wiry individual. They begin to walk toward Vasili’s direction.
    A couple feet out, the man in the fur coat speaks.
    STERLING WATERS
    You’re a hard man to find, Mr. Vanya.
    Vasili eyes the man suspiciously. Yuri steps out from behind Sterling.
    YURI POPOV
    It’s been a long time Vasili.
    VASILI VANYA
    Perhaps not long enough. Why you come all this way?
    YURI POPOV
    This man has something to ask you.
    Sterling points to the cabin behind Vasili.
    STERLING WATERS
    Maybe we can talk indoors?
    Vasili, still suspicious, nods his head. They all crunch through the snow to the small cabin. The roof has a cluster of sun bleached stag horns scattered across the top. Bear fur covers the windows, varying animal skulls hang like wind chimes.
    Vasili opens the door and waves his guests in. The first bodyguard breaks off from the group and darts inside checking the room. He gives a nod to the other and motions for Sterling to enter.
    Sterling is about to step over the thresh hold when –
    VASILI VANYA
    Will the others be joining us?
    STERLING WATERS
    What others?
    Vasili nods his head to the woods and hills. Sterling cracks a wry smile.
    STERLING WATERS
    No. They’re paid to freeze.
    He enters.
    INT. CABIN
    Yuri tosses a few more logs into the wood burning stove. Sterling takes off his coat and shakes it out.
    VASILI VANYA
    I don’t get many visitors here. I have black tea?
    STERLING WATERS
    Yes that would be fine.
    Sterling walks around the room looking at the furs and antlers.
    STERLING WATERS
    What do you hunt with? A 30-06 or a 300 Win Mag?
    Vasili places the kettle over the stove.
    VASILI VANYA
    No guns.
    Sterling glances around the room again.
    STERLING WATERS
    Traps then?
    Vasili rummages his cabinets for tea.
    VASILI VANYA
    No traps.
    STERLING WATERS
    Then what do you hunt with?
    He pauses.
    VASILI VANYA
    I hunt them my own way.
    Sterling glances at Yuri who quickly looks away.
    STERLING WATERS
    My name is Sterling Waters and I own Waters Trans Alaskan oil pipe line. You may have heard my name from TV or radio.
    VASILI VANYA
    No TV, no radio.
    STERLING WATERS
    My God man, the nearest road is fifty miles away. What happens if you get hurt or sick?
    Vasili walks over and hands him his tea.
    VASILI VANYA
    Then I die.

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