Lesson 24

[Dawn Greenfield]

Dawn Greenfield’s Filled In Missing Scenes – Lesson 24

What I learned doing this assignment is there are a lot of holes in the script.

1. Do a quick read of your script to pinpoint possible missing scenes. When you discover one, put a placeholder that you can return to.

2. For each missing scene, create a quick outline.

Add the assignment scene from Big Nose Sam.

Extend the next scene outside the bar where the cops take Elsie from the car.

Moved Jack’s “I don’t know what to do” scene to the New Plan area.

3. Write a high speed first draft for the most important of those scenes.

EXT. BAR IN BAD NEIGHBORHOOD – NIGHT

Jack parks the car. Elsie is asleep on the passenger seat. He quietly exits the car, locks the door manually so she won’t wake up from the beep. Jack goes into the bar.

LATER

A woman stands beside Jack’s car on her phone. Elsie screams from the front seat.

Cops arrive. They get the door opened and take Elsie into custody.

LATER

Jack returns to his car to find Elsie gone. He totally freaks out.

Bar patrons tell him the cops took the kid.