Lesson 27

[Benita Cullingford]

Benita. lesson 27 scene improvements.

I confess to not being able to do this assignment. I will look at weak scenes when I’ve finished writing all my scenes.

[Douglas Booth]

Hi Benita – It’s been fun “playing catch up” with you – I’m still trying to regroup after my big push to get to #23 (which may be largely incoherent to the “naked eye” – but at least I know what is going on). I hope you and yours are looking forward to a great New Year – and I look forward to reading your script at some point in the near future – along with being able to post a reasonably readable version of my own!

All the best,

Doug Booth

[michelle patnett]

Need more scenes that show demonstrate character growth, and provide various opportunities for Monique to pause and reflect.

Also need to add more early scenes to fully develop the relationship between Monique and her husband.

I’m also thinking of adding minor victories for Monique; little “yes” moments that help strengthen her resolve, and keep the balance of power more level. All the authority figures seem to be squarely on Jack’s side, so adding a few key characters who are on Monique’s side might tighten the tension and add to the “will she succeed” question.