Lesson 28

[Pat GALBRAITH Galbraith]

ASSIGNMENT 28

Subject line: Pat’s Chronological Edit

What I learned doing this assignment is some scenes were out of sequence.

1. Read your script while making improvements.

Specifically focus on the following:

• A. Improve the flow.

• B. Improve clarity.

• C. Improve the description.

• D. Improve the dialogue.

2. Tell us the main improvements you made in your script.

Improved the flow by adding a few scenes.

Some clarity improvements

Added some highlights to improve scenery, conflict,etc.

Improved dialogue but needs more improvements.

[Tasha Espinoza]

Tasha’s Chronological Edit

Doing this assignment, I learned: Chronological edits are super fun!

Improvements:

I went through my script and saw that every scene had areas where either flow, clarity or description needed to be improved–sometimes all three. I shortened, deleted or rewrote lots of action, description and dialogue to help the pacing of the story. I used Chat GPT as a thesaurus to easily elevate nouns and verbs.