Lesson 3

[Mary Albanese]

Mary Albanese’s transformational journey.

What I learned in this lesson – sandwich your story between the bookends of old ways vs new ways, with the challenges and stages of transformation being the layers of your sandwich’s delicious contents.

1. Logline for the transformational journey. A NY girl facing a dull conventional future takes a dangerous journey of discovery to re-define herself as an arctic explorer.

2. Define the old ways – doesn’t want to be stuck in rural NY hitched to a dropout because he owns his own double wide trailer.

3. New Ways – she faces many trial and error challenges to ultimately take her place in the mostly man’s world of scientific arctic exploration.

NOTE: Regarding the GROUNDHOG DAY analysis, I realized that the gradient stages Phil makes — from denial, anger, bargaining, depression, becoming, to acceptance – are the stages of grief as defined by Kubler-Ross’s classic model.

[Robert Kerr]

Bob Kerr’s Transformational Journey

What I learned in this lesson was the process of creating a log line and defining the Old Way and the New Ways brought into focus some of the challenges I am having with ACT 2. Much clearer now the path forward with the script.

Logline:

A losing college football team suffers the worst air tragedy in history. Their journey from funerals to returning to classes and all the challenges of practice transform this team into a winning attitude and with the foundation for a successful life.

Old Way:

It was just a college football team that wasn’t very good.

New Way:

They have a new purpose in life and it translates into a winning attitude on the football field and beyond.

[Sunil Pappu]

Sunil Pappu’s Transformational Journey

“What I learned doing this assignment is…to think of the change from old ways to new ways while creating a character logline that portrays the transformational journey.”

Title: Shin’ichi – The Disciple

Concept: A Japanese youth disillusioned by the war seeks a mentor. He carries on his mentor’s legacy to rid the world of misery to create the largest global organization of ordinary people while pivotal world events crisis-cross his journey for peace.

<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>1. Lead Character Logline:

• Lead character with an issue: A disillusioned Japanese teen diagnosed with severe respiratory disease feels emasculated and unpatriotic.

• Journey: drops out of school to seek a mentor and to find purpose after the devastating war to rebuild his life

• Transformation: to awaken to his mission as an ordinary citizen conducting over 8000 dialogues for peace, building numerous institutions to carry on the legacy of his mentor and receiving 390 honorary doctorates and over 800 honorary citizenships … etc

Character Logline: A disillusioned Japanese teen diagnosed with acute respiratory disease feels emasculated and unpatriotic until the devastating war destroys his world and he seeks a mentor he can trust to find purpose and awaken to a life of meaning to actualize his mentor’s vision for world peace.

2. Old Ways

Problem statement: Young Daisaku feels emasculated and unpatriotic when he is not able to join the war efforts with his sickly self.

– Buys into the war propaganda of the state

– Envies his brothers who are enlisted

– Tries to hide his respiratory disease to join the army.

– Joins munitions factory

– Loss of brother in the war

– Air raids that bomb his home twice

– Angered by the spiritual void

– Questions Meaning of life?

– Could not trust fraudulent intellectuals and politicians who sang praises of war and drove large numbers of youth to their deaths

3. New Ways

The solution state: Daisaku finds a mentor for life and awakens to his mission to work for world peace as an ordinary citizen

– Finding a mentor whom he could trust

– Schooled at “Toda University” – private tuitions by his mentor Toda

– Poetry, Songs, Fan dance, Piano and Photography as tools to express his vision

– Dialogues for peace – with world leaders, thinkers, artists, scientists, nurses, doctors, religious leaders, etc

– Building institutions to promote peace, culture and education

– Writing concrete peace proposals to UN for more than four decades

– Building a global solidarity of more than 12 million worldwide

[Gordie Cowan]

Gordie’s Transformation Journey

What I learned in this lesson is a way to craft a logline using the transformational journey from the person’s old ways to her/his new ways.

Logline (for TMS):

Parallel journeys, one in present times, one in 1968, of a son and the father he never knew, search for forgiveness from the other, where both discover the strength to forgive themselves.

Old Ways:

1960s: The father’s most formidable fear is his impending face-off with family, to apologize for his past deeds and to the son he never really knew. But that fear is so deep, so strong, so shameful, that he chooses instead to face death nightly, to help feed a starving nation – a sort of self-imposed punishment for his past deeds.

Present day: The son, having taken a similar “mistaken path” as had his father, chooses a dangerous journey to find his son-of-a-bitch dad, to understand his roots, so as to understand himself.

New Ways:

1960s: A best pal, the “change agent,” convinces the father to first forgive himself so as to find that courage to apologize to those nearest to him. And he does so. But one last death-defying mission stands in his way.

Present day: The son’s dangerous journey to find the father he never knew, reveals that his dad was a significant hero. He also learns his father was returning home to “be a real dad” to him. These revelations impact the son, so much so that he too forgives himself to return to family to make genuine amends to those he’s hurt.

[Deb Johnson]

Deb’s Transformational Journey

What I learned… If I gave in to my perfectionism, I’d never decide – so glad these assignments force me to narrow down and commit – but also give me the option to change as needed. Also – these big picture “frame” questions were helpful in pinpointing what excites me about this particular story.

Logline: A wealthy yet defeated treasure hunter finds a priceless treasure in a vast wasteland and gives up everything to buy the land.

Old ways: weary, burdened by life, wears a “happy” mask, trusting in self, pursuits happiness

New ways: relaxed, weightless, guileless, acknowledges his depravity, selfless

[Sharon Axcell]

Sharon Axcell’s Transformational Journey

What I learned doing this assignment is that I pretty much always knew where I wanted to end up, but couldn’t figure out the best place to start. Now I realise how easy it is – start with the opposite of where you want to end up!

Tell us your logline for the transformational journey.

A maverick, non-believing scientist….must stop her wayward experiment from devastating and all mankind… by forging and claiming her destiny completely.

Tell us what you see as the Old Ways.

– Tries anything to learn something new

– Scattergun, random approach – see what sticks

– Reactive

– Doesn’t believe it will work

– Entitled – handed things on a plate

– Degrading/ diminutive – puts people down

– Follows head, not heart

Tell us what you see as the New Ways.

– Committed

– Having Faith and ‘knowing’

– Trusting

– Values human life

– Knows to do ‘what’s right’

– Assertive and proactive

– Follows heart, not head

– Making her future – manifesting it

[Laurie Stoner]

Laurie’s Transformational Jounrey

What I learned doing the assignment is how the new ways to old ways clearly defines a transformational journey beyond what I used to put in a “normal” logline.

I just ditched what I was going to write so I’m tossing this one out, which is clearly far from profound, but a WIP.

Concept: A greedy dotcom billionaire convinced he only has two weeks to live gives everyone he’s every harmed a ten million dollars, learns forgiveness can’t be bought.

Old ways – excelling, driven, image-conscious, deceitful, and greedy.

New Ways – accepting, zen, honest, philanthropic

[Susan]

Susan McClary’s Transformational Journey

What I learned from doing this assignment is:

A new way to create a log line by using the transformational journey.

1. Tell us your longline for the transformational journey.

A (Post millennial) geeky, out of place “Jughead” dumbfounded by people’s reactions is thrown into an

unexpected situation forcing him to delve into his own and other’s true natures and become the new Dear Abby.

2. Tell us what you see as the Old Ways.

Born on the cusp of Millennial and Gen Z doesn’t fit either

Grouch meter for others’ reactions

No matter how nice he is no one his age accepts him

A mirror for other’s insecurities

Hopelessly apologetic

Basically shunned

His girlfriend threw him out, she thinks he’s either insulting or cold and withdrawn

Sees himself through other’s eyes – that he

bungles everything

Bewildered about himself, and other’s needs and feelings (does he always have to guess?)

3. Tell us what you see as the New Ways

Confident

Great Listener

Asks the right questions

People ask for his advice

Happy

Content with self

Ignores other people’s mirror opinions

Stops trying and starts living

[Andre HowardMitchell]

SUBJECT: Andre’s Transformational Journey

Profound Logline: EARTH, our world-planet, a decimated and polluted planet (soil, sea/ocean, air, and now space-junk), must be cleaned up (soil, ocean and space), or it will fall into deterioration, resemble Mars.

Beneath the Profound Logline: A Planetary Prince, due to Ultra-individualistic personality pride succeeds in trapping humanity into default miscarriage of their bestowal mission, is put on trial in Gabriel vs. Lucifer. He and all who participated in the Lucifer rebellion await final adjudication.

Beneath that: The descendants of Adam&Eve, depicted through our modern-day Human Protagonist Male and Female (consider breaking the fourth wall), live with the consequences of grandma Eve’s “Her body- Her choice, yet OUR consequence.

a. LEAD CHARACTER WITH AN ISSUE.

i. EARTH as a Character. Our World/Planet.

ii. A Planetary Prince. Lucifer and The One-Hundred (fifty male fifty female).

iii. The descendants of Adam&Eve, depicted through our Human Protagonist Male and Female (consider breaking the fourth wall).

b. JOURNEY.

i. A decimated and polluted planet (soil, sea/ocean, air, and now space).

ii. Succeeds in trapping humanity into default miscarriage of Adam and Eve’s bestowal mission. But he did not accomplish his purpose of leading them into open rebellion against the universe government via the unseen father. Seeing today’s world under his control and the consequences thereof. The violation of honor and trust. The cause of miscarriage of humanity and as planetary prince a high ranking one at that, must deal with the ramifications of default mission and fallen world.

iii. Her (grandma Eve) body, her choice, OUR consequences. A society of fatherless children and the ramifications of such; fatherless activities.

c. TRANSFORMATION.

i. Earth. The planet Earth must be cleaned up, soil, ocean and space-junk; or it will resemble Mars, but worse.

ii. Due to Ultra-individualistic Personality pride, Lucifer is put on trial in Gabriel vs. Lucifer. As Planetary Prince, he sees the result of modern-day society of fatherless and a planet in peril; all his responsibility. And with ego and pride being his downfall, this is his conviction.

The Planetary Prince’s Corporeal Staff (The One Hundred) are usually removed from the planet in connection with the next adjudication at the time of the second Son’s arrival on the sphere. Before leaving, they customarily assign their various duties to their mutual offspring and to certain superior native volunteers. On those worlds where these helpers of the prince have been permitted to mate with the superior groups of the native races, such offspring usually succeed them.

iii. Humanity. It is always difficult to induce evolutionary minds suddenly to accept advanced Revealed Truth. Man is an evolutionary creature and in the main must get his religion by evolutionary techniques (92:6.19).

Revealed Truth: personally discovered truth, is the supreme
delight of the human soul; it is the joint creation of the material mind and
the indwelling spirit. The eternal salvation of this truth-discerning and
beauty-loving soul is assured by that hunger and thirst for goodness which
leads this mortal to develop a singleness of purpose to do the Father’s will,
to find God and to become like him. There is never conflict between true
knowledge and truth.

What I learned doing this assignment is there is an Old Way and a New Way.

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[ray Moore]

Ray’s Transformational Journey

What I learned doing this assignment is how to create a logline the explains the transformation of the lead character.

1. A woman, struggling through creating a business while dealing with her husband and partners death, learns to have faith in God in a most unusual way.

2. When her husband first passes away, she could not imagine going through the process of creating the business because it was something they were going to do together.

3. She learns to believe that God is in control and that she just has to believe in herself and the process.

[Jacqueline Escolme]

Jacqueline’s transformational journey

1. A frustrated English housewife rediscovers who she really is on an unexpected adventure across America that forces her to face who she’s become and risk everything to change it.

2. Old ways – Suppressed and controlled by her husband. People pleaser constantly self-sacrificing. Unhireable and unemployed.

3. New ways – Empowered and confident. New job enabling her to be independent. Leaves her husband.

4. What I learned is to put more transformation into the logline and increase the jeopardy on her journey.

[Brendan Guerin]

Brendan’s Transformational Journey for action war film REG’S STORY.

In this assignment, my biggest challenge was clearly defining the old ways and the new ways and which characters these ways relate to. Lead character Reg Mitchell and his design team are made up of characters who are already thinking and acting in new ways from very early in the film. However, they face resistance from the general public and their MPs who are still trapped in old ways of thinking and behaving. So I feel that Reg and his design team are the Agents of Change who must persuade MP’s and the wider English public – as Transformable Characters – to see the perils of their old way of thinking and the urgent need to adapt to the new reality of the inter-war years.

Log-line for transformational journey

In the Great Depression, a young English engineer diagnosed with aggressive bowel cancer devotes his life to designing superior fighter planes in the hope of defending his beloved family and country against rising European fascism.

The Old Ways

The aviation industry can only build planes from wood and canvas, limiting their speed and power in military conflict.

Traumatised by the First World War, the public are in no mood for rearmament against rising European fascism, despite to growing risk of a second world war.

In the austerity of the Great Depression, Politicians refuse to allocate much-needed funding to advancing English defences for fear of voter backlash.

Reg Mitchell, who struggles to accept that he may soon die of bowel cancer, undergoes radical surgery in a bid to prolong his short life, complete his mission and realise his vision.

The New Ways

The English parliament – now awake to the perils of rising European fascism – fully supports investment in aviation supremacy in the hope of defending England against a Nazi invasion.

The military aviation industry has advanced from the wooden struts and canvas of early seaplanes to more powerful, streamlined, metallic land-based aircraft that are faster and deadlier than enemy aircraft.

Reg Mitchell now accepts his fate with grace and dignity, devoting his remaining days to be with his family while also supporting the design and construction team that will continue his noble mission after he dies.

[Richard Whiteside]

Rich Whiteside’s transformational journey:

4. What I learned doing this assignment: I learned the importance of at least beginning story development with the exploration of a central premise, old ways that must be shed to change, and new ways to adopt to replace failing old ways.

1. Logline: Chris, a high school push who needs money fast for his dying mother, makes a drug run through the precarious Canadian–Montana wilderness in the dead of winter with a street-tough drug mule he can’t trust.

2. Define the old ways: Chris believes he has no opportunities and does not have a passion for anything other than smoking weed. He feels lost, lonely, and discarded by life. He has reached a point of not caring about anything but his dying mother—who’d rather die than fight her cancer.

3. New ways: He learns that life will push him around if he doesn’t have a goal to pursue and act definitively in pursuit. Having barely survived the ordeal, he has a new perspective on life and takes proactive steps towards a brighter new future.

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