Lesson 3

[Claudia OBrien]

Subject Line: Claudia’s Beat Sheet – Draft 1.

My vision: To become the best screenwriter I can be, and to find success in the industry.

What I learned from this assignment is: when we start adding all of the pieces we’ve already worked on, so much of the script is already laid out!

Beat Sheet Draft 1:

Act 1: Grace goes to war, the weight of her family’s expectations on her shoulders.

Grace PJ 1: Grace receives the blessing of her newly-ordained
brother and her father as she reports for duty as an Army nurse – along with
an admonition not to “disappoint them.”
Deeper Layer: Grace’s older brother went AWOL after D-Day. The
family has disowned him but Grace hopes to find him.
Ann AJ 1: Ann meets Grace. Grace
says she is the oldest of six children. Ann says she has only a kid
sister, Margie.
Deeper Layer: Ann is a closet lesbian who was disowned for her
sexual orientation.
Inciting Incident: Grace meets Booker, a Tuskegee airman. She
is immediately drawn to him – and also notices how others treat him.
Booker PJ 1: Booker is attracted to
Grace but rejects any idea of a relationship.
Ann AJ 2: Ann notices the attraction and is jealous.
Grace PJ 2: Grace thinks a doctor’s diagnosis is wrong – and Ann
agrees with her.
Turning Point 1: Grace follows the doctor’s directions and her
patient dies because of the incorrect treatment.

Act 2: Grace’s interests diverge from her family’s but she tries to remain obedient.

Grace PJ 3: Grace starts listening more to Ann and questioning
those in authority.
Grace PJ 4: Grace writes to her parents about Booker and
confesses to her sister that she is falling in love.
Ann AJ 3: Ann works to undermine
Booker in Grace’s eyes (and maybe vice versa).
Booker PJ 2: Booker performs
heroically and saves the life of another pilot in a dogfight – but when
they get back to base, that pilot has claimed the credit.
Grace PJ 5: Her parents respond forbidding her from any kind of
relationship with “a man like that.” In an effort to forget Booker, Grace
starts dating a White soldier, Liam Connelly.
Booker PJ 3: Rachel Schneider, a
Jewish nurse, befriends Booker, talks about the Jews in Nazi Germany.
Grace PJ 6: Grace wanders around the new town, discreetly
trying to find someone.
Turning Point 2: Grace gets pregnant – and discovers Liam with
another woman. Grace tries to commit suicide.
Ann AJ 4: Ann finds Grace before she can kill herself and stops
her.

Act 3: Grace starts to rebel.

Grace PJ 7: Grace chooses the least bad among the alternatives
– and asks Ann to give her an abortion.
Ann AJ 5: Ann convinces Grace to get subversive.
They pilfer medical supplies so that the wounded Black soldiers can be
treated medically as well as the White soldiers.
Grace PJ 8: Grace gets bolder about going around
each new town, looking for someone.
Grace PJ 9: As recovery
rates in their ward soar, their racist, misogynistic commanding officer tries
to undermine them – and Grace is furious.
Ann AJ 6: Ann tells Grace
that nobody has the right to dictate who you love
– but Grace thinks she’s talking about Grace’s love for Booker, not Ann’s
love for her.
Turning Point 3: Grace confesses her love to Booker, but he
rejects her. Ann, comforting Grace, finally confesses her love – and Grace
rejects her, appalled.

Act 4: Climax and Resolution

· Booker PJ 4: Rachel convinces Booker not to give up on his life – and to try to win back Grace.

· Grace PJ 10: Grace finds her older brother, suffering from PTSD and a TBI, being cared for by a prostitute. He begs her to leave him be – and to not tell their parents he is alive. She realizes no one controls who they love – and understands that Ann is in the same position as she is.

· Ann AJ 7: Grace finds Ann and apologies. Tells her about her disowned brother. She confesses that she was disowned by her family – everyone except her kid sister Margie – when they discovered she was a lesbian.

· Booker PJ 5: Booker gets in dogfight protecting a bomber – and is left behind by those pilots. He crashes – and everything goes black. He wakes in the forward hospital, being treated by Grace.

Grace PJ 11: Grace will try to save Booker, no matter what,
even if they can never be together. Her brother arrives at the hospital,
meets Booker.
Climax: the Germans mount a counterattack and the forward
hospital is under siege. Everyone is ordered to leave, with as many
patients as they can take. Grace refuses to leave Booker, who is too
injured to move.
Ann AJ 8: Ann realizes she loves
Grace enough to want her to be happy. Ann – along with Grace’s brother
Patrick – sacrifices herself to give Grace and Booker a chance at life and
love. But first, she gives Grace the key to a safe deposit box, and whispers
a final request.
Resolution: Patrick’s and Ann’s heroism saves Grace and Booker.
Booker admits his love for Grace and agrees that they should try to find a
place where they can be together.
Grace PJ 12; Booker PJ 6: Grace and Booker remove papers from a
safe deposit box. At a rundown tenement in Philadelphia, they meet Margie –
and give her the deed to Ann’s home and enough money to raise her kids,
all from the safe deposit box.

[Tony Scott]

Tony J. Scott Beat sheet 1

I learned that stories are not thought out in dreams and inspirations. Stories are created through order, formula and structure.

· HIGH CONCEPT: In a world where the Vatican is winning the war against the Vampires a young black woman, half human and half vampire, must fulfill prophesy by traveling back and forth through time to Savannah Ga, 1863 to kill her slave ancestor, break her family curse and lead the future peace agreement.

· MAIN CONFLICT: The Vampires are losing the war to The Vatican and though she’d rather die than become a full on vampire, Nadia must fulfill a prophecy, over throw her father to help lead the world into peace.

Old Ways: self hatred, out spoken, sickly, hates her heritage, disobedient, hates the world she lives in.

New Ways: Loves herself, proud, victorious leader, the one to lead the world to peace, proud of her heritage.

Core Traits: Intelligent, determined, compassionate, but impulsive and defiant.

4-Act Structure:

ACT 1:

Opening: It’s Nadia’s 21^st birthday party and transformation celebration (“Usiku wa Kinyonga).” She is to turn from half human and half vampire to full vampire. This transformation demands that she bite a human and drink human blood.

However after a memory is triggered about how human captives are treated, and what happened to her mother, she refuses to go through with the transformation. She doesn’t want to become a vampire. She secretly plans to commit suicide.

Inciting Incident: Nadia is deceived by her conniving father and discovers a way to end the curse for her. She is caught by her uncle trying to permanently end the life of her vampire grandfather who is currently lying in a sleep state in the family mausoleum until a time pre-determined.

Turning Point: Nadia finally remembers what happened to her mother and it’s not the lie her father told her years ago.

2. starting with your 4-Act Structure, add the following components into your story to create the first draft of your Beat Sheet.

Genre: Syfy Drama Horror

Act 1: Nadia wants her father to end the war with the Vatican.

Inciting Incident: The TV broadcast states that the vampires are winning the war but Nadia, looking out the window, and everyone else can see the war waging closer to the Vampire city limits daily.

Nadia PJ: Nadia voices her opposition about the war and that her father should sign the peace agreement before they are all wiped out. Not that she cares but she is thinking about her uncle.

Lucius AJ: Reminds her of the tv broadcaster’s report.

Nadia PJ: mentions how every vampire killed makes the humans stronger in battle.

Vincent TC: Agrees.

Lucius AJ: Assures them his scientists all agree they are just rumors.

Nadia PJ: reminds Lucius that he keeps the scientists locked away in a dungeon lab.

Deeper Layer: Lucius knows they are losing the war but doesn’t care.

Deeper Layer: Nadia, for reasons unknown to her, hates being half vampire and wants to live her life as a human.

Nadia PJ: Mentions how things would be different if her mother were still here.

Reveal: Lucius gives us a glimpse of Nadia’s mother’s last day with them, running for her life and being carried off in a Black Suv.

Lucius AJ: Lies about Nadia’s mother abandoning them and lashes out angrily about how Nadia fiddles with her red bracelet when she is stressed.

Deeper Layer: Lucius feels guilt when Nadia plays with her red bracelet. Her Mom had one just like it.

Lucius AJ: Agrees to talk more about Nadia’s peace concerns after the celebration is over.

LATER:

Nadia PJ: Nadia has a traumatic memory triggered during her Usiku wa Kinyonga.” party.

Inciting Incident: Human bodies are brought into the banquet hall by the serving staff and hung 2-3 bodies on display at each dining table. They are served as human blood fountains to the vampires.

Deeper Layer: This is how Nadia remembers seeing her human mother the last time she saw her and before her memory was suppressed.

Inciting Incident: Nadia refuses to continue with the ritual of her full vampire assimilation.

Nadia PJ: Nadia confronts her father, embarrasses him at her coming out celebration. She storms off.

Vincent TC: shows up to Nadia’s room and places her under guard.

Lucius AJ: Takes up the offering for the war effort from the town’s vampire citizens.

They argue:

Lucius AJ: In anger, has an attendee thrown in prison and sentenced to death during the party.

Deeper Layer: Lucius is caught in a lie but won’t admit he’s wrong about the war effort.

Lucius AJ: After the party, He scolds Nadia for embarrassing him in front of the villagers and the higher ups attending the party.

Nadia PJ: brings up her mother again. (Psychiatrist).

Deeper Layer: She figures out it’s why she hates vampires.

Lucius AJ: Jokes with Nadia about killing her grandfather while he sleeps.

Cat in the window: Dancing after the dinner ends, ongoing entertainment.

Vincent TC: Uncle tries to comfort Nadia. He explains what Lucius meant about the rumor of breaking the curse.

Lucius AJ: gives Vincent a threatening look.

Deeper Layer: Lucius is not really joking.

Nadia PJ: meets with the mansion scientists who agree because they think Nadia will use it on her father who they hate.

Nadia PJ: Takes an IV bag of dead man’s blood to her grandfather’s crypt to kill him. The crypt is guarded 24/7.

Inciting incident: attempts suicide.

Vincent TC: Saves Nadia from burning alive. He explains why it wouldn’t work.

Vincent TC: Nadia would have to go back in time to do it if it were possible.

Turning Point: Vincent gives Nadia a family heirloom. It glows but only she can see it.

Deeper layer: In reality Nadia really just wished that her father wasn’t in charge. Now she truly hates him. She really wants peace with the humans.

· Act 2 Nadia begins to time travel so she can kill her grandfather.

New Plan: Nadia discovers the location of her vampire patriarchal ancestor in the year 1863 and plans to time travel to kill him on the plantation where he is a slave. Her ancestor has to die by her hands, a blood relative, to break the curse.

Plan in Action: To find out who her ancestor is and kill him. Nadia thinks she has to fit in with the slaves on the plantation deceiving the slaves and the slave masters.

Midpoint Turning point: Nadia discovers that the kindest person on the plantation, the one elder she is most fond of is her ancestor that she has to kill.

Nadia PJ: Nadia is being held prisoner in her guarded room.

Inciting incident: Nadia time travels for the first time.

1. Travel to past

Vincent TC: Is in the room when it happens.

Nadia PJ: Is met in the bushes by the side of the road by a black man on a horse. She is expected.

Deeper Layer: Nadia doesn’t know where she is or how she got there or if she is dreaming or that the stranger on the horse is her grandfather.

Nadia PJ: questions the stranger and gets some answers.

Deeper Layer: The stranger answers as if he was expecting the questions.

Nadia PJ: remembers some of her vampire history and asks about Josiah. Gets no answer. Not polite to ask.

Nadia PJ: Riding on the horse, she gets a tour and watches as the slaves work the tobacco fields on a cloudy day.

Deeper Layer: Josiah doesn’t want Nadia to know who he really is yet.

Inciting Incident: A neighboring plantation owner confronts Josiah and demands the return of a runaway. He Threatens him with a whip. He’s surrounded and killed by slave vampires.

1. Return to present

Nadia PJ: Returns to the present.

Deeper layer: She notices that the stranger is wearing the same family heirloom.

Vincent TC: Is hysterical about how she moved from one place to another without being able to see her and her being half human.

Deeper Layer: Whenever Nadia returns to the present she is always laying down asleep and has to wake up.

Nadia PJ: Explains what happened.

Deeper Layer: She thinks it was all a dream.

Nadia PJ: and Vincent go to visit grandfather’s crypt.

Vincent TC: tells her the truth about how her father was captured by the slavers and taken to the colonies.

Deeper Layer: it’s a secret he’s kept from Lucius.

Nadia PJ: doubles down. Her grandfather has to die.

Vincent TC: realizes he’s now talking to himself.

Nadia PJ: hears Vincent mention something about a journal.

2. Travel to past

Nadia PJ: In the bushes by the road. She hears slave catchers on horseback.

Inciting Incident: Nadia watches as the kind stranger/Josiah deals with the slave catchers and their horses and three runaways.

Deeper Layer: she still hasn’t found out Josiah yet.

Inciting Incident: William Sanders plantation is surrounded by hooded night riders with torches. Josiah leads the other vampires to battle.

Turning Point: Nadia is convinced that the kind stranger from the road is actually Josiah, her grandfather.

Nadia PJ: hides out and hopes she doesn’t leave until she can kill Josiah.

Nadia PJ: Nadia stands over her sleeping grandfather holding a machete and has a chance to kill him but she notices her name written in his journal next to a prophecy.

Deeper Layer: Nadia doesn’t know that her grandfather is causing her to time travel.

Nadia PJ: her and Josiah have the talk.

Nadia PJ: Notices the entry in the original journal, Vincent is the true heir.

2. Travel to present

Lucius AJ: He has a secret meeting with a Vatican member about the processing plant and the war. Nadia over hears the conversation. Nadia overhears the zoom meet

Nadia PJ: hears that Vincent knows everything about everything and is very upset.

Vincent TC: He won’t tell her why he went along with Lucius’ plans.

Turning Point: Nadia feels she can no longer trust Uncle Vincent.

Deeper Layer: Vincent is not Nadia’s uncle but is her father but can’t tell her in order to save her life.

Nadia PJ: confronts Vincent again and tells him about the journal entry. She figures out that Vincent already knows.

Nadia PJ: Waits for a response, has to figure it out herself. It all makes sense now.

Deeper layer: Nadia always wondered why she seemed so much closer to her uncle than her own father.

Nadia PJ: Nadia needs the journal with the fake entry to make a plan.

Nadia PJ: She convinces Vincent to gather what allies he can before Lucius goes further with his plans.

Lucius AJ: He’s confused when he finds out that Nadia is not in her room where she should be or anywhere in the mansion.

Inciting Incident: Lucius reads a note about a fake entry in his father’s historic recorded journal and the word prophecy.

Character Connection: Staring at a photo, he has a triggered flashback about the affair between Nadia’s mother and his brother Vincent.

Journal/Thumb drive

Nadia PJ: steals the fake journal and a thumb drive from Lucius’ safe.

Nadia PJ: her and Vincent read the original journal.

Nadia PJ: watches the video of her mother’s death with Vincent in his office.

Vincent TC: knows what’s on the video.

· Act 3 Nadia falls for the soldier

Rethink Everything: Nadia is back to the present and researches the vampire archives. She wonders why her father is in the leader of the Vampire covens and not her uncle who is older.

New Plan: Nadia realizes that it is her great elder, Josiah Freeman, who is calling her back to the past for a reason, to fulfill a prophecy in the future. “From future’s past will peace come.”

Turning Point: Vampire Hunters arrive at the plantation operating as Emancipation Proclamators who go from one plantation to another spreading the news of freedom but also killing vampires along the way.

Lucius AJ: Has a prisoner attempt to kill his father but catches him in the act. Betrayal.

Deeper layer: Lucius stages the murder attempt to show he is a hero and worthy leader.

Character Connection: Standing over his father’s crypt he has a flashback to when his father was abducted by slave hunters.

Lucius AJ: kills the villager in the sun room and makes a big show of it.

3. Travel to past.

Nadia PJ: She returns to the plantation to find Northern Soldiers there to announce the emancipation proclamation to the slaves.

Nadia PJ: She has romantic feelings for Cpt. Sherman.

Nadia PJ: She and Josiah talk more. Prophecy, The Caves, The curse.

Nadia PJ: meets William Sanders and his very large wealthy family.

3. Travel to present

Nadia PJ: She and Vincent research the vampire archives and finds out all slaves were free in 1863 and that there were vampire hunters during the civil war doubling as soldiers.

Cpt. Sherman: Tortures one of the slaves. Why won’t the slaves leave the plantation since they are free?

Vincent TC: finally explains that he has betrayed his brother twice and deserves a chance.

4 Travel to past.

Nadia PJ: Nadia finds out that slaves of the plantation are missing and presumed dead.

Nadia PJ: Spend intimate time together.

Inciting Incident: Cpt. Sherman reveals to Nadia his secret.

Turning Point: Cpt. Sherman has to detain Nadia when it’s feared that she will warn the vampires.

4 Travel to present.

Nadia PJ: Escapes captivity by returning to the present.

Deeper Layer: Nadia was hoping that Cpt. Sherman wasn’t a vampire hunter.

Lucius AJ: Calls a hurried meeting for a vote to take over the family officially. He assures them he will call for peace when he is made permanent head ruler.

Inciting Incident: Vincent, in confidence, demands that Nadia be present for the vote.

Lucius AJ: sends Vincent off to locate Nadia.

Lucius AJ: During the meeting a war general reports the war on the front lines and the outcome to Lucius and others.

Lucius AJ: has the general and others at the meeting secretly killed in his side office.

Lucius AJ: bites the general, gets a firsthand look at the war from his pov and then throws him in the office sun room.

Lucius AJ: Discusses what needs to happen when Nadia disappears in front of Lucius.

5 Travel to past.

Turning Point: Lucius interrogates Vincent.

Lucius AJ: throws Vincent in the secret side sun office. He thinks Vincent and Nadia are up to something.

Deeper Layer: Lucius can’t bring himself to kill his brother but leaves him there.

Turning Point: Lucius can’t find his father’s original journal with the fake entry.

Lucius AJ: He has the guards search the whole mansion for Nadia but she can’t be found.

Deeper Layer: Lucius is afraid that Vincent is going to tell everyone the truth.

· ACT 4 Dilemma, Nadia becomes a fully fledged vampire.

Climax: Nadia has to kill her ancestor before Cpt. Stanley can or she will live her life as a vampire in the present. She has to save her ancestor’s life by killing the soldiers.

Resolution: After the soldiers are all dead, Nadia can’t bring herself to kill her ancestor. She embraces who she is and falls in love with her history and family heritage. She discovers her grandfather’s true journal that records that Vincent should be the head of the Vampire Covens in her grandfather’s absence. She returns to the present and leads the Vatican/Vampire peace accord.

She searches the history books to now discover that the freedom news never reached the slaves in Texas for another two years because she killed the emancipation proclamators before they could reach Texas delaying freedom for over 250000 slaves.

THE PLANTATION IS UNDER ATTACK

Turning Point: Nadia realizes she has full vampire benefits when in the past.

Inciting Incident: Nadia feels she has to save her grandfather when she discovers most of the clan is dead. He’s cornered and injured.

Nadia PJ: shows up in time to save her grandfather from the fate of the vampire hunters.

Nadia PJ: She has to bite Cpt. Sherman, killing him and the other soldiers.

Nadia PJ: she can see his whole history of killing vampires while she drinks his blood.

Nadia PJ: Nadia because she has finally killed a human becomes a full time vampire.

Nadia PJ: Nadia returns to her time and brings her grandfather’s original journal.

5 Travel to present

Inciting incident: She proves to the Vampire Council that Lucius has deceived them all and that Vincent should be the interim head of the Vampires.

Deeper Layer: There can now be peace, the war will end.

Lucius AJ: Has been secretly putting dissenters in the dungeon jail and sentenced to death.

Lucius AJ: He escapes from jail and walks into the sunroom. Suicide.

Inciting Incident: Vincent is voted in as head.

Inciting Incident: The Vatican/Vampire peace Council is formed.

Vincent TC: The Vatican/Vampire Peace accord is broadcast on every Media Channel. Vampires and Humans formation up and march away. Surviving humans are released from the food processing plants.

Nadia PJ: finds out that she has altered history and that over 250K slaves in Texas were never freed because she killed the soldiers.

Vincent doesn’t know that she is referring to Juneteenth.

[Will Jennings]

Subject line: Will Jennings’ Beat Sheet – Draft 1

My Vision: I will write movies that are extremely funny and entertaining and bring a sense of satisfaction and fulfillment to a world starving for true enjoyment.

What I learned from doing this assignment is how to bring different perspectives that make the story so much deeper and interesting.

Genre: Comedy

Act 1: The girls are informed by their mother the Queen it is time to travel to Earth and begin the mission.

Abigail PJ 1: Abigail is petrified of going to a place filled with lunatics. Gwendolyn: Camp! Are you crazy?

PJ 2: The girls are sucked into a wormhole and whisked into space passing by stars and constellations.

Brandi AJ 1: Brandi is picked up by her mother in a Dodge Charger from a government building.

Deeper Layer: She just was released from juvenile hall for committing a series of misdemeanors.

Inciting Incident: The girls are introduced in school and a rude girl embarrasses them in front of the entire class.

Brandi AJ 2: Brandi is threatened with losing her status and just destroys and humiliates the twins to no end as the class is roaring.

PJ 3: The girls realize this is not going to be a love feast and they will need to toughen up to be taken seriously.

Turning Point 1: The girls decide to throw a party for all the uncool kids and the bad girl shows up with her mother’s motorcycle gang.

Brandi AJ 3: Riding on the back of a motorcycle, Brandi is hurling insults at anyone she recognizes.

PJ 4: This is the final insult, and they respond by scaring off the motorcycle gang with flying drones. One has a trooper siren, another flashing cop lights, and yet another pretends to be a police helicopter.

Deeper Layer: The motorcycle gang thinks the swat team is headed their way and they thunder off to the complete delight of the uncool kids as they see the girls controlling the drones.

Act 2: The girls try contacting the authorities to assist.

Deeper Layer: The harder they try; it becomes obvious that the police and city hall are not interested in giving any protection from the gang.

Brandi and her mom: AJ 4: They begin to get reports that the twins are trying to turn up the heat and are amused at the newcomers.

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: The girls find out that Brandi’s mom is the leader of a crime family and they have put a lot of people in danger.

PJ 5: Sir Daniel assures them he will protect all the kids from any type of threat.

Deeper Layer: The girls find great comfort in knowing how skilled Sir Daniel is at reconnaissance and defense.

Act 3: They decide to take a trip back to Fairyland and formulate a strategy against such fantastic odds.

PJ 6: As the girls are entertaining two school friends at their house, a pillow fight breaks out and the four of them cartwheel into the transporter room and are sucked into the one-way wormhole and blasted back to Fairytale Land.

Deeper Layer: The girls are frightened of what their mother the Queen will say when they arrive with two humans.

PJ 7: As they arrive in Fairytale land the Queen is waiting and sprinkles some fairy dust on the two guests so they will not remember anything of their adventure.

Turning Point 3: They decide to bring muses and fairies back to Earth to gather evidence against the bad guys and to end their reign of terror.

AJ 5: The gang calls a meeting to decide how to get rid of the medaling interlopers.

The gang summons all their mobsters to the twins’ house to show them who is boss once and for all.

AJ 6: They decide to smash up the place.

Deeper Layer: The thugs have destroyed their otherworldly toys and have left the twins defenseless.

Act 4 Climax: Everyone arrives back from Fairyland at the same time. Immediately, the fairies and muses appear and disappear while punching out the bad guys until they freak out and split.

Resolution: The gang goes to prison and the girls are now the undisputed leaders of the new cool kids.

[Ron Johnson]

<font size=”3″>Ron’s beat sheet- Draft 1</font>

<font size=”3″>My Vision: I want a space that is dedicated to writing, so I can have an entire wall for notecard storyboarding. I want my projects to advance in competitions and then be requested by the studios. I want to see those projects in festivals, in theaters, on streaming platforms. I want writing and producing to be my full time job.
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<font size=”3″>What I learned doing this assignment is with one or two hidden truths about my characters it provides a drive we don’t see, causes actions to be made that might or might not be understood by the character, but in any case makes the story stronger.</font>

Surface Layer: Eddie is forced into the drug trade by his actions and inactions.<div>

Deeper Layer: Eddie’s been repressing his fears in life but wants justice.

Major Reveal: Father died during a home invasion. During Ducassi’s showdown Eddie aims to kill Ducassi.

Influences Surface Story Eddie’s conscious bothers him at first, but he realizes he can have an efffect on the drug scene.

Hints: He uses his reputation to influence drug buys. Recruits two enforcers to his side. Notices and follows someone who’s hanging on the fringes of the drug scene discovering a government drug trade route.

Changes Reality: Actively goes after the govt drug route, could be the drugs that killed his friend. Eddie wants justice for his dead friend.

8 Balled Outline

The Agent confronts Ducassi, a drug dealer, in a back alley, and cuffs one wrist to a pipe. The Agent interrogates, beats on Ducassi a bit to keep him in line and focused on his duty to the Agent.

Beginning: Eddie turns down a promotion when he’s clearly capable of the job. We learn he use to be a driver but just wants to work the dock and go home at the end of the day.

Inciting Incident: At a party in the country/farm lands, Eddie is partying with co-workers and a girl who loves cocaine.

The Girl knows where a stash of cocaine is hidden and lures Eddie to go a bedroom with her. Eddie is drunk and turns down the offer of cocaine, but the Girl convinces him to go with her.

The girl finds the cocaine and pours some on a dresser, Eddie spills his drink and wrecks an 8 ball of cocaine1.

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”>Ducassi wakes up a hung over Eddie on a couch from the party. Ducassi demands payment, but </font>Eddie doesn’t have 1500 in cash. Ducassi, anger mixed with fear gives Eddie a gun and tells him to raise the money.

Turning Point 1: Eddie fails to raise the money to pay off the debt. Ducassi, more fear than anger says he needs to pay his guy and aims a gun at Eddie, The girl is handcuffed to a radiator and she pleads with Ducassi. Ducassi turns his aim from Eddie to the Girl and demands the money my any means necessary. Eddie in a panic kills the Ducassi to save a girl.

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”>The Agent watches who Eddie meets with outside the court house, then at the bar, then sits in his car outside Eddie’s apartment.</font>

Act 2: Town views Eddie as a hero, he’s uncomfortable with the attention.</div><div>

Agent Taylor introduces himself as Ducassi’s handler, Taylor lays the hammer down with threats of charges if he doesn’t perform. He forces Eddie to become his new CI and to keep his operation going.

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”>Eddie continues to struggle with his hero status, </font>

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”>In a down moment Eddie talks with his friend about the home invasion and his trauma triggered his action to shoot Ducassi.</font>

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”>The Agent comes to Eddie for information and Eddie has none. </font>

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”> Agent gives Eddie some hard cold advice and tells him to leverage his rep in the crime world as a cold blooded killer into actionable intel.</font>

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”>Eddie uses his anger to get the job done as a CI, he puts people in their place with his rep as a killer.</font>

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”>Eddie notices a dude who seems to be around then things go down. He remembers him being at the party when the coke was ruined, is at the bar when Ducassi is making deals, and now when he’s making deals. </font>

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”>The Agent is contacted by his SAG and wants to shut down the op with his CI dead, the Agent says his new CI is making progress in Ducassi’s place. </font>

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”>Two enforcers beat down Eddie to enforce the pecking order.</font>

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”>Eddie is convinced the hanger around set up the beat down, catches his plate number. </font>

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: Eddie realizes this path leads to either prison or death. He must break free from the agents grip.</div><div>

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”><font face=”arial”>Eddie uses the detective to get info on the fringe man. </font></font>

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”><font face=”arial”> He takes that info and goes to city hall, the library and internet searches Eddie discovers he has purchased a foreclosed farm and adjacent property. </font></font>

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”><font face=”arial”>Using his drone Eddie discovers a make shift landing strip where bundles of drugs are unloaded. He sets up a </font>surveillance camera and monitors the house.<font face=”arial”> </font></font>

Act 3: Uncovers govt plot running drugs through the town. </div><div>

Eddie gets a movement notification at the farm and Eddie gets the drone and heads out. From the drones perspective a small plane lands and bundles are unloaded into an SUV. It appears a white pilot, a Hispanic man talk with the fringe dude and the fringe dude gets into the SUV, the plane departs.

<font color=”#4d5c6d” face=”SF UI Text, sans-serif”>Goes to a federal building for assistance behind the Agents back.</font>

Turning Point 3: Fed govt building Eddie is informed the govt knows about his activities </div>

Act 4 Climax: Face off with the cartels, govt and locals over the drug route

Resolution: with his drug life over he takes over assisting the agents victim’s assistance.

[Mahee Sanapareddy]

Mahee’s Beat Sheet Draft 1

My Vision – I want to be a great writer who is well-respected and recognized in the industry, with successful books published and blockbuster movies produced. I want to create a successful movie franchise that audiences all over the world will love, rave about, look forward to, and continue to enjoy many years from now.

What I learned from doing this assignment is creating a sequence of events for my Beat Sheet.

Genre: Science Fiction Thriller

Title: Gates of Wrath

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ACT 1: In a wide-open field, a large, shiny, and spectacular extraterrestrial spaceship descends slowly and lands on the turf.

DuVernay AJ 1: Reverend DuVernay eagerly awaits along with several politicians and world leaders as 1ONTAE, an alien warlord, an extraterrestrial pharaoh, and an absolute giant of a human being, emerges out of the spaceship to spread chaos, corruption, hatred, and violence. As he stands with authority, everyone kneels, rises, and kisses his hand. DuVernay does his part as well.

DuVernay AJ 2: Outside a building in Manhattan, DuVernay gives a stirring public speech, instigating the audience of mostly youngsters to do whatever it takes to fight for justice.

DuVernay AJ 3: Inside his home, DuVernay abuses his supporters, lusts after women, and tortures his followers.

Deeper Layer: DuVernay shows his flamboyant personality in public, strengthening his support to help him in the upcoming elections. But in private he exhibits his true disturbed personality.

Trevon PJ 1: Trevon looks up to Reverend DuVernay in awe, inspired by his philosophies and his magnetic personality.

Trevon PJ 2: Trevon and a gang of violent mobsters barge into a conference hall of historians and go on a destroying spree. In that process he and his father, Professor Cedric Campbell, lock eyes with each other, surprised to find themselves on opposite sides of the melee.

Trevon PJ 3: Reverend DuVernay, sitting in the audience, lets out a sinister smile and applauds the mobsters. Trevon looks deadpan as his father and DuVernay go at each other.

INCITING INCIDENT: Professor Campbell threatens to expose DuVernay’s corrupt practices and evil agenda and thwart his chances of getting elected.

Trevon PJ 4: Trevon drives his father home. Gets an earful from him but disagrees with his ideas and stubbornly refuses to listen to him.

Deeper Layer: Trevon senses that his father put his life in peril by going after a high-profile politician like Reverend DuVernay.

DuVernay AJ 4: DuVernay excludes Trevon from his gatherings and starts to distance himself from Trevon.

Sean PJ 1: Sean wakes up from a nightmare, sweating profusely, his eyes filled with terror. He had just gone through another interdimensional information download and this time it’s about him and Trevon – shockingly in an alien landscape. He struggles to make sense of it.

DuVernay AJ 5: DuVernay gathers his men and plans a secret attack on Professor Campbell without Trevon’s knowledge.

TURNING POINT 1: Professor Campbell is murdered in his own home.

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ACT 2: Trevon’s worst fears have come true.

Trevon PJ 5: Trevon suspects DuVernay’s hand in his father’s murder. But a cryptic message scribbled on his father’s bedroom wall on the night of the murder throws his mind into a turmoil.

Trevon PJ 6: Trevon takes up his father’s failed ambition.

DEEPER LAYER REVEAL: Trevon comes to a realization. DuVernay turned out to be the crooked politician exactly like his father had stated all along.

DuVernay AJ 6: DuVernay slams Trevon’s actions in the public media labeling them as the product of a deranged mind.

Trevon PJ 7: Trevon reaches out to his mob friends for information on DuVernay. They agree to help him.

Deeper Layer: Trevon doesn’t realize that they all have been compromised and are actually working for DuVernay.

DuVernay AJ 7: DuVernay organizes his mob of supporters and plans to kill Trevon as he has become a thorn in his flesh.

TURNING POINT 2: Sean comes to Trevon’s rescue as Trevon escapes the attempt on his life. Goes into hiding.

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ACT 3: Trevon is a wounded lion.

Trevon PJ 8: Determined to find an answer, he pores over his father’s copious notes, research papers, and studies. Comes to know it wasn’t DuVernay’s men that killed his father. It was an assassin who is not of this world.

Deeper Layer: This is another twist flooding his mind with more questions.

Sean PJ 2: Sean mentions the weird nightmare to Trevon. Suggests a possible link between the assassin’s origin and the alien world.

Trevon PJ 9: Trevon finds the missing piece of the puzzle in his father’s research work. A reference to a certain Planet X in the Sirius star system.

Trevon PJ 10: Trevon realizes he must find a way to inter-dimensionally travel to Planet X searching for the assassin. Asks Sean for help.

Sean PJ 3: Sean is the only one who has the expertise of inter-dimensional travel. But he refuses to cooperate citing the dangers, complications, and time constraints involved.

Deeper Layer: Sean remembers a prophecy that is destined to doom him and fears the mission will make the prophecy come true.

Trevon PJ 11: Trevon reminds Sean he had helped him in the past. Sean reluctantly agrees. Trevon and Sean embark on an inter-dimensional voyage to an alien world on Planet X.

TURNING POINT 3: The alien world is being run by the crooked regime of the same evil warlord 1ONTAE who had come to Earth to unleash chaos, violence, and hatred.

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ACT 4: Trevon is shocked to encounter TALIYA and FALLAG, the extraterrestrial super-human alter-egos of himself and his father Cedric, in the alien world. They have been on the opposite sides of an age-old war. FALLAG and his rebellion have been imprisoned in underground caverns and TALIYA has been fighting for the evil warlord 1ONTAE.

Trevon PJ 12: Trevon realizes this is a parallel world and his entire life is being mirrored here.

Deeper Layer: The decisions he takes here will have a direct impact on him in his own world.

Trevon PJ 13: Trevon comes to know that his inter-dimensional voyage has been pre-planned and he was intentionally brought here on a mission. He must enter through the gates of wrath, lure the evil genius TALIYA away from 1ONTAE’s dark forces, and help the rebellion win the war. And he’s on a race against time.

Sean PJ 4: Sean begins to get worried. The sight of the alien landscape has triggered memories of his nightmare and has confirmed that the prophecy of doom will certainly become a reality.

Trevon PJ 14: Trevon successfully entices TALIYA to join the rebellion.

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Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict/Alien World: A bloody revolution ensues. TALIYA, FALLAG, and the rebellion defeat the evil warlord 1ONTAE and win the war.

Resolution/Alien World: Trevon helps TALIYA install his father FALLAG as the emperor and himself as the protector of the alien world. Peace is restored. FALLAG gives Trevon a long-lost truth he must take back with him and spread it among the people.

Trevon PJ 15 / Sean PJ 5: As seconds trickle down, Trevon and Sean embark on their return journey to Earth.

Sean PJ 6: Sean’s return journey doesn’t end well. He loses his way and gets trapped in a forbidden world.

Deeper Layer: One cannot change or avoid a foretold prophecy. One can only embrace it.

Trevon PJ 16: Trevon returns to his earthly world, a completely changed person.

Deeper Layer: He has a new mission. He must fight for a greater purpose by fulfilling his father’s ambition and spread the long-lost truth.

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict/Earthly World: He runs against Reverend DuVernay in the elections. Exposes DuVernay’s dark side to the media and public.

Trevon PJ 17 / DuVernay AJ 8: DuVernay loses his power and his support. Gets defeated by Trevon in the elections.

Resolution/Earthly World: Trevon fulfills his father’s ambition and spreads the long-lost truth.

[Tully Archer]

Okay here’s the thing, I started a spreadsheet and I really super duper don’t feel like typing everything out again. If anybody cares, I’d be happy to email it.