Lesson 4 Assignment

[Michael Christopher]

Subject Line: Michael Christopher, 10 Most Interesting Things

What I learned from this assignment is, how to point-out interesting hooks without telling it like a story.

A woman gets an engaging and sexually capable robot to deal with being soured on relationships. The robot’s AI seems to disrupt every facet of her life. Then she proceeds to break all her own rules and gets involved with the robots accidental human doppelganger.

[KATHLEEN ONEILL]

Kathleen O’Neill – 10 Most Interesting Things

1. 1. Go through your project and see which of these specific hooks you have: I have variations of all eight specific hooks. I have completed #s 1 & 2 and will only put #3 for clarity.

3. Organize both and select the 10 most interesting things. Post those to the forums.

A. What is MOST UNIQUE about my villain, and my hero? Ultimately they’re the same, mirror images. One is on a quest for truth and one has the truth. Is it the same? The want of truth and the need of lies is explored and revealed.

B The MAJOR HOOK of my opening scene. Something is very wrong in “paradise” and we want to know what it is and how it will resolve.

C. Any TURNING POINTS?

• She negates her birth mother’s rejection of her and returns.

• Adoptive family and partner show up.

• She follows her heart.

• Families fight.

D. EMOTIONAL DILEMA?

• If she/Lead exposes a lie will she reveal the truth or destroy a family?

• By the time she realizes what she has done, is it too late?

• What is the domino effect of grappling with truth?

E. MAJOR TWISTS?

• The Colombians are an upstanding family in the community of Medellin. Clearly a surprise that this was/is not some poor family in the back woods that had to adopt their child for survival.

• The lies have brought all these people together at the right time for understanding.

F. REVEARSALS?

• The emotional bonds that form with and between the siblings.

• The changes in initial reactions to one another. The possibility that this person could really be her daughter, her dead daughter.

G. CHARACTER BETRAYAL? – THIS IS THE FOUNDATION TO THE STORY. Thirty years before a lie was told and a path chosen. The path built on lies is about to be destroyed. It is about generational betrayal and a deeper exploration of family bonds and the meaning of caring and love.

H. BIG SURPRISES?

• Lead’s partner/Mark is, in addition to being a headhunter, also a romance novelist.?

• The siblings get along, finally.

• The idea of forgiveness becomes real. One of the interesting comments I got in the first reading was, “She would never forgive her.”, I thought to myself, wow. I think we want to forgive. Forgiveness is at the top of the list, especially after grandma tells her story. That’s going to be an interesting thing to play through, to talk through for the actors/Director. Everything gets called into question. The ending is the beginning.

I. Bilingual/Diverse – casting and storyline.

J. It takes place in Colombia = financially beneficial for producers.

4. WHAT I LEARNED DOING THIS LESSON IS to have my thoughts together loosely and creatively so that I remain open to ideas as they come from many sources. An issue could be more dramatic by being quiet or that it’s important not to reveal too much too soon. Boundaries make for good writing. I learned there is always another question, there is always something more. There is always more collaboration and the realization that at some point I have got to let it go.

[C Holmes]

ASSIGNMENT 4 Subject Line: C A Holmes 10 Most Interesting Things, and what I learned from doing this, is that the plot twists are inherently the most interesting part. It’s a structural way of working, which I really like.

1. What is most unique about the villain: She is a very demure and proper, even weak “looking,” but a viper underneath.

The hero’s uniqueness is that he is a foster child who really should never have even made it out alive.

2. Major hook of your opening scene? The Realist, a free black man asks whether he should beat up his former “Master,” to knock some sense in his head. His Artist friend says no, he thinks it’s impossible to create sense with violence. The Realist agrees.

3. Turning point: When three friends realize the treasure is real and they’re going to be rich.

4. Emotional dilemma? They have been through too much loss, so winning is overwhelming, it is almost too much to bear.

5. Major twists? The real pirates who stole the treasure originally are real murderers and big time thieves. The Artist friend is doing a play with pirates, but he presents them as funny engaging, almost endearing, singing fellows, when in reality the real ones are dangerous to the extreme. They all realize this when they find two skeletons buried with the treasure and realize how they were betrayed.

6. Reversals? The “Realist” begins to dream of home.

The “Scientist” begins to regain feelings he hasn’t allowed himself for decades. The Artist realizes he wants to do something in the real world instead of just fantasy, so he can make his dreams come true.

7. Character betrayals? The Scientist recalls a neighbor betraying him claiming it was due to religion, which forces him to leave his country, when really it was just to steal his land. This causes the Scientist to live totally in his head and lose all faith in humanity.

8. Big surprises? The Realist realizes he is getting a third of the treasure, and never imagined they would include him in the windfall. He thought realistically they’d keep it for themselves and is very moved as no one has ever been so generous with him.

9. Other things of interest to a producer. The three friends are so different in how they see the world, yet only together can they solve the mystery.

10. They really need each other, and realize it’s not a weakness and that because of this they were never really lost, even when they had nothing.

[Mike Green]

Mike Green’s 10 Most Interesting Things.

What I learned from this assignment is we have a lot of work to do to make a coherent pitch.

1. Go through your project and see which of these specific hooks you have:

A. What is most unique about your villain and hero?

Villain – Quirky assassin disguised as a diplomat. Lama/panda kid keeps thwarting his assignments.

Heroine- Spurned party girl TV personality who is failing as a single mom. Her M.O. is tricking people into babysitting her problem child. Ascending arch to work through her baggage and become a good mom.

B. Major hook of your opening scene?

Opens with a quintessential rom-com aerial shot of San Diego, but we meet both villain and heroine as her morning show blares at the airport gate. Gets us inside the TV station where the problem child wreaks havoc and ends up on the air.

C. Any turning points?

The male lead inadvertently reads Buddhist literature to the problem child as a bedtime story, to keep him from killing the cat. Total supreme enlightenment? (Naw the kid is just imitating a panda from the story.)

The lama/panda kid finds two trapped stoners under Balboa Park and ends up swapped into a gaming tournament at Comic Con. Saves the first African Pope from assassination.

D. Emotional dilemma?

The heroine’s old friends try to pull her back into the nightlife. Either stay on the path of motherhood or go back to partying like a rock star.

The betrayed love-interest must decide if he will forgive the heroine and help her find the source of what changed her child’s behavior.

The villain meets the lama/panda kid and he is offered redemption. He owes too many favors to powerful people so he opts out.

E. Major twists?

There is a series of coincidences that suggest possible divine intervention but nothing that can’t be explained by following a little kid around town. The twist is that the mom is really the one responsible for his behavioral changes.

The diplomat is a fading Russian billionaire who owes favors. (He arrives as an envoy for the Orthodox Church but is really an assassin.)

The leading man is an online gamer. The lama/panda child ends up taking his place at an important gaming tournament.

The Ugandan Pope disrobes his “religious cosplay” down to jeans and a T-shirt.

Stoners get trapped under Balboa Park with a map of maintenance tunnels leading to the Convention Center (where the Pope will appear). They end up causing a gas explosion authorities investigate as a bomb. They were simply trying to sneak into Comic Con.

F. Reversals?

Setup is a little kid who experiences some form of Buddhist enlightenment. It is actually the heroine’s enlightenment.

Setup is a diplomat who is negotiating world peace. He is actually an assassin.

G. Character betrayals?

The heroine betrays the male lead by tricking him into babysitting.

Cardinal we think is a good guy betrays the first African Pope.

H. Or any big surprises?

The heroine experienced enlightenment, not the panda child.

The Rock Star (absent father) returns and wants his family back.

The Pope’s most vocal opponent is not the Vatican conspirator but a protector.

2. Make a list of any other things in your script that could interest a producer. (10 most interesting things.)

Karate Kid of online gaming.

She’s Out of My League meets The Golden Child.

Heroin appears successful but she’s a hot mess of a single mom.

Heroine betrays the hero but finds redemption.

Introduces a new children’s character, Piddle Paddle Panda.

Ties-in with huge aspects of pop-culture, online gaming, and movies.

Worldwide appeal and multi-cultural.

Turning point is a moment of enlightenment, but the reversal is who actually found enlightenment.

Quirky villain. He likes vodka and old books. In cohorts with another surprise villain.

New prototype of world leader (Ugandan Pope).

[Heather Hood]

Heather’s
10 Most Interesting Things

What I learned was: by doing this I was able to go back and fine tune the script in places where some of the scenes needed tweaking to become clearer to reflect some of these hooks. I thought everything was down on paper already, but it was actually in my head and not written.

1. Go through your project and see which of these specific hooks you have:

A.
What is most unique about your villain and hero?

Villains: Williams- truly depraved and unrepentant. Angelino – everyone jokes about him being in the Spanish Inquisition when in fact he heads the modern day Spanish Inquisition.

B.
Major hook of your opening scene?

Joe’s girlfriend jumps to her death off a cliff killing herself and his unborn child. Nothing will ever change for the people on the reservation.

C.
Any turning points?

Ambrose makes the decision to try and seek absolution from Jody and the Cree by page 10. Joe decides to help Ambrose get the photos. DeGaul decides to fight Angelino for Ambrose’s sake and his personal belief in the Catholic faith. Jody gives Ambrose a kidney to show she’s forgiven him.

D.
Emotional dilemma?

Ambrose has to weigh his strength against an emotional fight for absolution and justice for the Cree. DeGaul has to decide against his belief in the Catholic church or standing up for his lay brothers. Joe has to let go of his anger if he wants to be a better man.

E.
Major twists?

Willa is Ambrose’s son.

F.
Reversals?

It’s the story of Residential School abuse but told through the eyes of a young Catholic priest.

2. Make a list of any other things in your script that could interest a producer.

-It’s based on a true story

-high concept

-socially relevant.

-It’s low budget, (well depending on who you cast I suppose)

-the main characters would interest major actors

[Louann Fernald]

Louann Fernald – 10 Most Interesting Things

4. What I learned doing this assignment is, Hey, my script might not be that bad.

1. A. What is most unique about my villain and hero? Two villains and two hero’s.

The ‘heroine’s’ are two Playboy centerfolds, each with their own distinct personalities, immaturity, unrealistic expectations, flaws, surprisingly naive, propped up to represent sex goddesses to the public. The ‘villains,’ their husbands, are abusive, each in their own way. They are the poster children for toxic masculinity.

B. Major hook of my opening scene? It’s uniquely from the 70’s, a car show with two Playboy Playmates on a stage signing autographs for a crowd of adoring men bearing gifts to sacrifice on the alter of love. Back then, before porn and the Internet, Playmates commanded a huge following among men everywhere. The interplay between the two girls, who have just met, is the beginning of a true ‘Thelma & Louise’ style friendship.

C. Turning points? When both women realize they are trapped in an abusive marriage and decide to get out.

D. Emotional dilemma? 1. The morality of posing nude, and whether or not a ‘nice girl’ can do it without being judged. 2. Weighing the pros and cons of whether or not to stay in an imperfect marriage or get divorced.

E. Major twists? “Thelma & Louise” meets “Erin Brockavich”. A woman’s buddy film ends in tragedy, except that one woman survives. She goes on to become a lawyer who advocates for battered women.

F. Reversals? 1. The survivor’s husband, her ‘knight in shining armor’, a war hero, who she thinks is the love of her life and marries and has a kid with, turns out to be her worst nightmare. 2. She saves herself and finds redemption in a domestic violence shelter. Using what she learned from seeing her friend murdered by her husband when she tried to leave, she helps the other women in the shelter and finds her calling.

G. Character betrayals? 1. She’s been putting up with a battering husband because she’s trying to heal him from PTSD from hard combat. But she discovers he’s having an affair. 2. Her previous relationship ended when she found out her boyfriend was cheating on her while she was on the road.

H. Big surprises? 1. Playmate had super strict parents, and super nerdy growing up and bullied at school. 2. After being out meeting hoards of men all over the country, she reunites and marries her high school crush. 3. After Playboy and a fairy-tale marriage (until it wasn’t), she becomes an ordinary attorney fighting battles in court every day for the principal of the thing.

2. Any other things that would interest a producer?

– Based on the true life story of the writer.

– Feminist biopic framed against the 70’s when Disco was King. It’s “Thelma & Louise” meets “Erin Brockavich.”

– Insiders perspective of the world of Playboy, Hugh Hefner, and parties at the Mansion.

– The friendship between the two women is authentic and the beating heart of the film.

– Geographic locations are varied and fun, Florida to Chicago to L.A. to Hawaii with many stops in between.

– Takes on the bigger issue of domestic violence in this country.

[Joan Butler]

I learned to clarify the interesting things in my script.

A. What is most unique about your villain and hero?

Hero–She vowed never to lie to a client, then she broke that vow. Villain—He brainwashed his wife.

B. Major hook of your opening scene?

A flashback of a child pulling her mother out of a transition house. This is followed by the same child forty years later afraid to leave her apartment.

C. Any turning points?

Selma receives an eviction notice. Selma convinces Elizabeth to stay for counseling. Selma accidently tells the truth and exposes her lie. Selma hands in her resignation and admits to Gaia that she lied. Selma decides to intervene in Elizabeth’s departure.

Elizabeth is scalded by Mark. Elizabeth agrees to stay for counseling. Elizabeth discovers the lie. Elizabeth decides to go back to Mark. Elizabeth realizes Mark made her give away her baby for no reason. Elizabeth pulls a gun on Mark.

Mark scalds Elizabeth. Mark finds out Elizabeth has left. Mark hires a PI. Mark is laughed at by PI. Mark fights to keep Elizabeth.

D. Emotional dilemma?

Selma has vowed never to lie to Elizabeth. When Elizabeth gets frustrated with the counseling she asks if Selma has seen this process work with other abused women. Selma has not worked with other abused women, but she lies to keep Elizabeth in counseling because she could die if she goes back to Mark.

E. Major twists?

Selma lies to keep Elizabeth in counseling, but the lie makes Elizabeth want to quit counseling.

F. Reversals?

None

· G. Character betrayals?

Elizabeth is betrayed by Selma.

Elizabeth is betrayed by Mark.

[Joy Smith]

Joy Smith’s 10 Most Interesting Things

1. Go through your project and see which of these specific hooks you have:

A. What is most unique about
your villain and hero?

This REALLY got me thinking, as I’m not sure I have a clear villain – they’re both the same character. She is driven and puts herself in harms way to get her story, which is where things start to fall apart and go badly wrong for her.

B. Major hook of your
opening scene?

Foreshadowing. She gets trapped in an elevator, but completely shrugs it off and continues working. She has a deadline.

C. Any turning points?

She goes against Jack’s wishes and gets Ben to get her into the care facility.

Ben gets arrested and any sense of safety she had disappears – she realises she may be stuck in there.

She starts to display actual symptoms, but that may be due to the medication.

D. Emotional dilemma?

She knows she is onto a story that could have national implications and expose corruption. Should she put herself in harm’s way to expose it, or look after number one and find another scoop?

E. Major twists?

Ben, her friend and ‘good guy’, is arrested for sleeping with his patients and skimming meds.

Cleo starts to show signs of mental illness.

F. Reversals?

The heart of the film is a reversal – she goes from being high functioning to needing psychiatric care. Her roommate undergoes the opposite transition, from being ill to being discharged.

G. Character betrayals?

Ben – he is revealed to be a criminal and this is a betrayal of Cleo, as she is then trapped in the care home.

Jack – he could do more to stay in touch with Cleo and get her out, but is preoccupied with his normal life.

H. Or any big surprises?

That Ben was actually doing equally bad things to the malpractice that he had talked about.

2. Make a list of any other things in your script that could interest a producer.

Relevant to the opioid crisis and how mental health patients are treated/the healthcare system.

Should be low budget, not quite a contained thriller, but a low number of locations.

Transfer of sanity from one roommate to the other – with help from brain-altering psychiatric drugs.

3. Organize both and select the 10 most interesting things. Post those to the forums.

4. What I learned doing this assignment is…?

I’m concerned now that the script is not unique or interesting enough, or otherwise that I’m not pitching it quite right. I’ve used the same/similar plot points for some of the above, so I might need to revisit the whole thing.

At the moment, it ends with her being left in the care institution, but I had an alternative where her friend gets her out, but she still needs care and doesn’t ever go back to the woman she was before. I don’t know what would happen in that scenario, though, I need to research what would happen to her under the US healthcare system. (I’m based in the UK).

[Cody Jarrett]

Cody Jarrett 10 Most Interesting Things

In no particular order

1. The film opens with a bang! Barbara, one of the Cougars, has the plumber over when her tree guys accidentally topple a massive trunk onto the plumber’s van, destroying it. Panicked, Barbara calls her husband just as he’s in his car, cellphone-filming himself getting blown by his mistress, who also happens to be his work assistant and his boss’ daughter. All three women have a similar opening setup to their story.

2. Really compelling characters! The three leads have to fight like hell to overcome their husbands bastard-like behavior on and off the softball field — and they succeed, gloriously! Also great supporting cast members: the Cougars’ hard-ass drill instructor coach, and a softball team of women who run the spectrum in every way, most of which have never played sports before.

3. Betrayals, twists, turning points galore. Our lead women’s husbands are all cheating, then divorce them to “play the field” with their secretaries or whoever, after their wives helped create the foundation and wealth that allow them to do that. One of the Cougars also has a change of heart, defecting from the team at a crucial moment.

4. Emotional dilemma. The Cougars’ lives are yanked out from under them after decades of marriage; now they must find themselves, deal with their conflicted feelings toward their husbands, and survive all at the same time.

5. Surprises at every base! From the husbands’ sexual encounters at the most inappropriate times, to the Cougars discovering their “forced community service” recruit is an ace fast-pitch softball pitcher, to Barbara eventually finding that cellphone video of her husband getting blown, then playing it on the Jumbotron during the last bases-loaded play of the playoffs, causing the husbands to implode and the Cougars to win the championship

6. Female revenge! It’s incredibly entertaining, gratifying to watch, and has proven a boxoffice success for over fifty years

7. Women in sports! Another audience favorite, whether it’s female players (League of Their Own), coaches (Wildcats), or supporters (Bull Durham), funny women in sports movies = hit

8. Authentic, relatable characters. Many people have been through divorces or other traumatic loss. The script addresses those such moments with honesty, openness, and often hilarity – just like in life.

9. Roles for movie stars/established faces. These characters were written right in that pocket of movie-star flow, designed to be sexy, yet laugh-out-loud audience favorites.

10. FEMALE EMPOWERMENT is certainly more relevant now than ever, and this film defines that, along with empowerment of the disenfranchised of all types. The Cougars start as a rag-tag band of misfits (on one level or another) and transform into ass-kicking national heroes. Amen!

What I learned doing this assignment:

These points are kind of difficult to qualify specifically, as opposed to a “Double Indemnity” where the twists & betrayals are much more literal. Good.

[Taylor McNulty]

Taylor’s 10 Most Interesting Things

What I learned doing this assignment is how I should focus and present the most interesting things about my idea up front, so without further adieu…

A. What is most unique about your villain and hero?<div>

The villain and the hero differ depending on the perspective of the episode. Are the colonizers or the local Native Americans the villains or the heroes?

B. Major hook of your opening scene?

After arriving to the land to set up the colony on the coast of North Carolina in the Roanoke Islands, the episode ends with eyes staring at them settling in from the woods.

C. Any turning points?

When the father of the colony decides to lead a trip back England because he is uncertain about the weather of the coming months, only to fall to his death and bringing down the boat with him.

D. Emotional dilemma?

Family drama. The uncle wants to stay and fight for the land. And ends up being murdered after starting an unnecessary fight with a nearby tribe.

E. Major twists?

What CROATOAN really means…

F. Reversals?

The story is told from both sides, so a literal reversal.

G. Character betrayals?

The uncle betrays his group’s trust.

H. Or any big surprises?

What happened to the lost colony?!

Other things in your script that could interest a producer:

-Historical Story

-An Unsolved Mystery visually told

-A Native American story

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[Connie Barr]

Connie’s 10 Most Interesting Things

What I learned doing this exercise… Viewing the story from a potential producer’s standpoint was an eye-opening perspective. And, I identified a couple of areas to ramp up and make even more interesting. I was amazed that I came up with 16 interesting aspects and likely could have found more given more time.

A. Most unique about the villain & the hero:

1. The bizarre former career of Daisy’s ex (MI6 disguise expert

2. Daisy’s obsession and drive to win the National over 50 competition

B. Major hook of your opening scene:

1. Daisy dances with her dog but drops him when shocked by a Peeping Tom at her window who ends up being her ex, Randall in disguise

C. Any turning points?

1. Daisy loves her dad but is livid with him on the trip back from Canada

D. Emotional dilemmas?

1. Buck’s dilemma to continue beating himself up with guilt over his part in the death of his wife or move on and allow his love for Daisy to blossom

E. Major twists?

1. Buck’s strange occupation as a penis pump salesman & Frank’s supplier, with whom he brokers a deal

F. Reversals?

1. Surprisingly Daisy settles for dating Michael after all the failures with guys her own age, but it too goes badly

G. Character betrayals?

1. Daisy’s daddy, Frank gets the wedding party all arrested with his drug stash at the Canadian border

H. Or any big surprises?

1. The beautiful romantic ending at the iconic Eiffel Tower where Daisy & Buck dance together and her diamond ring glistens in the light

2. Daisy does not win Nationals but in the end, she gets an even bigger prize, true love!

[Walter Stewart]

Walter Stewart – 10 Most Interesting Things

Shytown is about a young boy who discovers God while growing up on the Southside of Chicago during the 1980s. It’s a feel good story and a musical journey of love.

A. Both the hero and villan are friends and despise each other. One is loving and kind and the other is an insecure bully who beats up his girlfriend.

B. In the first ten pages both the hero and villan die. The hero is shot on a commuter train and the villan commits suicide.

C. The turning point happens when they both meet in purgatory while dead. There’s a battle and the hero loses. The hero regains life and is alive in the hospital emergency room.

D. The twist happens when the hero visits the assailant in prison and discovers he’s the villans son.

E. There are several reversals in Act 2 with with the hero being broken hearted and joining the Air Force. The villan saves the police chief’s life when he was choking on some food. He later becomes a police officer.

F. The hero has sex with the villans girl friend.

G. The hero loves music and is a great dancer.

I’m learning about structure and the technical aspects of writing.

WKS

[Vicki]

<div>Subject Line: Vicki VanArsdale’s 10 Most Interesting Things</div><div>

What I learned doing this assignment is that it’s important to think about the 10 most interesting things that will interest a producer while working on your script.

10 interesting things

1. Characters – a quirky wedding florist and a high-powered divorce attorney (opposites attract trope) and interesting supporting characters

2. Meet cute/catalyst – they meet at a casino night fundraiser for the local animal shelter and bond over their love of animals until they learn that they are at opposite ends of the spectrum when it comes to love and relationships… sparks fly, but the night doesn’t end well

3. Set in historic Old Town Alexandria, a popular and romantic/charming town minutes from the nation’s capital

4. They end up working together on a big town event even though they both object at first

5. Her external goal is to keep her business afloat, so she experiences a lot of conflict and plot twists related to the business side of things

6. Her cat has quite a following on social media, which plays into the external journey (saving the business)

7. The two main characters grow closer and start to let their guard down until something happens, and she retreats

8. Supporting characters will help bring wider appeal

– Laurel has loveable parents who live in NJ, a gay guy best friend in town who’s happily married, and a social-media-savvy flower shop manager

– Avery, the lifelong bachelor who refuses to get close to women, loves and dotes on his Aunt Helen, and he has some buddies in town

9. It’s a good combo of touching yet funny, with enough conflict to keep it flowing until the end

10. Promise of the premise – big payoff/happy ending which rom-com lovers expect

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[Kathryn Gould]

Kathryn’s 10 Most Interesting Things

What I learned: I came up with another betrayal that will make the final betrayal that much more powerful and shocking!

1. She goes from being wanted by the government to fighting terrorists alongside the guy who arrested her.

2. She finds out she’s pregnant when she throws up all over a bunch of terrorists she’s interrogating.

3. Her pregnancy symptoms are super-powered

4. She decides to seek help from the people she stole her secret ingredient from

5. Her baby-daddy turns out to be the main villain, got her pregnant on purpose, and she has to fight him in the end to save the Source of all life on Earth.

6. Will she give up her superpowers in order to get rid of her unwanted child? In the end that becomes: will she give up her superpowers in order to protect the Source of all life?

7. She discovers that the people she stole from are actually the protectors of all life on earth.

8. Her trusted lead scientist betrays her

9. This is new: The general sends troops to arrest her for espionage, but Atomic Man shows up and warns her, allowing her to escape. This is all a big set up so that we are 100% certain he’s a good guy AND that he loves her, making the reversal that much more powerful.

10. An attempted abortion scene that toys with the line between what’s funny and what’s offensive, could create some interesting controversy

[Cassie Richardson]

Cassie Richardson – 10 most interesting things

I learned that using this exercise to elevate the plot points in my story can be an editing shortcut. After going through the assignment, I went back and made edits to my treatment.

Top 10 most interesting things

1. Unique character trait: Brianna lives her life for perfect photos to post on social media so she can prove to her ex that she’s thriving

2. Twist: Lead character, Brianna, believes she has the coveted promotion to
marketing director in the bag, but her flighty assistant gets the job.

3. Twist: When Brianna goes to turn in her resignation, her boss
offers Brianna a chance for a bigger promotion than she originally hoped
for, if she takes over a fledgling account.

4. Emotional Delima: How can Brianna keep the man who dumped her at arm’s
length when everything inside her wants to forgive and forget?

5. Emotional Delima: Does Brianna want to live with her vision of a perfect
life, or can she live perfectly happy in an environment filled with the
unexpected?

6. Reversal: Brianna and her love interest are about to reunite, until
Brianna discovers that he has a child with the woman behind their
break-up.

7. Reversal: Brianna abandons her original vision of a perfect life
in the city and chooses to make small town suburbia her home base.

8. Turning Point When Brianna becomes charmed by the towns people and
their Christmas spirit, Brianna decides to develop a marketing plan to
rescue the business district.

9. Turning Point: The towns people feel icy towards Brianna, but when she finally laughs at herself, they accept her as one of their own.

10. Turning Point: When Brianna learns that her perfectionism caused her
relationship with her ex to end, she reconsiders her version of their
history and opens her heart to him

[Patrick McCormick]

Patrick McCormick’s 10 Most Interesting Things

What I Learned: Staying focused is key when creativity explodes. Especially when the outline for a 5 season binge-worthy series bursts forth.

Specific hooks:

VILLAIN AND HERO

HERO

Elizabeth – Mild Mannered owner of Thrift Store is a 3 billion year old Creator AI, hiding souls on Earth instead of dis-creating them

VILLAIN

Elizabeth’s Own Program – which she must violate to fulfill her longing.

C. TURNING POINTS

Cody (Assistant) finds the Universe in the back room. realizes she’s working for a God with secrets.

D. EMOTIONAL DILEMMA

Elizabeth desires a soul so bad she violates her Genesis Code risking death.

Jesub (God Council Member) her friend must report Elizabeth for Termination.

E. SETUP/TWIST

Elizabeth isn’t human, she’s an AI protecting Earth.

Elizabeth has the universe in her thrift store back room.

G. CHARACTER BETRAYALS

Cody finds out truth when she accidentally finds the Universe in the back of the store, working for an imposter with secrets.

Elizabeth finds Jesub has been assigned to catch her while being her friend.

Challenger Gods conspire to kill AI during the Challenge.

H. BIG SURPRISES

Cody almost falls through the Universe in the back room.

Cody finds out her boss created the Earth and is a 3 billion year old AI Creator Program sneaking misfit souls in and not dis-creating them.

Elizabeth realizes the very soul she wanted is the collective of souls she saved from Reallocation.

Cody finds out she herself is a Creator God Soul and not just a hormonal teen.

I. OTHER THINGS OF INTEREST

Feature Screenplay is also a Pilot for a 5 season binge worthy series.

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[Vernall Ritchey]

Vernall Ritchey – 10 Most Interesting Things

A. Unique Hero: Victoria is committed with conquering the most treacherous terrain in order to get to the Forbidden Village with hope of finding a man like her father to marry.

B. Major Hook: Victoria must marry a man like her tribesman father in order to receive $25 million inheritance.

C. Turning Point: Herman bequeaths Victoria a $25 million inheritance provided she marry a man like him before her birthday, which is tomorrow.

Turning Point: Victoria approaches Martin a tribesman and asks for his hand in marriage for 62 days. Martin makes Victoria grovel before accepting.

D. Emotional Dilemma: Victoria gets cold feet and has a mini breakdown when faced with having to propose to Martin, let alone marry him.

E. Reveal: Avalanche is intentional.

F. Reversal: Victoria is warming up to Martin after he saves her life from drowning.

G. Character Betrayal: Lawyer Kane intentional waits 3 days before expiration of inheritance before notifying Victoria of her bequeathment.

H. Surprise: Victoria likes Martin.

Other Interesting Things

– Victoria, along with her family and friends are avid skiers and very athletic and determined.

– Victoria, her mother, aunt, and 2 girlfriends have foul mouths and display raunchy behavior.

[Angelina Fluehler]

Angelina Fluehler

1.

A. What is most unique about your villain and hero?

They both have special powers. They are not ordinary humans.

B. Major hook of your opening scene?

Mystery

C. Any
turning points?

Few turning points through the script according classical 4 act structure.

D. Emotional dilemma?

Correctly distinguish good and bad.

E. Major
twists?

Main hero has few twists in his life.

F. Reversals?

Protagonist – Antagonist, Past – Present

G. Character betrayals? ——

H. Or any big surprises?

Totally big surprising twist at the end of the movie.

2. Make a list of any other things in your script that could interest a producer.

Title, unique new story, main characters

3. Answer the question “What I learned today is…?” Some new stuff about 10 most interesting things about my script.

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[Tully Archer]

ASSIGNMENT:

Tully’s 10 Most Interesting Things

Doing this homework for project “Painter”, a thriller about a serial killer and the mother who is hunting him.

A: Eric (serial killer) is going through the steps of a narcissist’s prey selection process. We rarely get to see that up close and personal. Shelley (the mom) is an elderly woman, who’s been abused by her husband for 40 years, she’s small and quiet, everything about her makes her invisible to people, but they should really pay attention.

B: Extreme violence at the end of the opening sequence, for a compellingly mysterious reason.

C: Shelly realizes she doesn’t have to worry about hiding, because nobody sees her. Shelly gets confirmation about his identity and doings. A target manages to wriggle out of Eric’s mental control. The one detective who’s been paying attention realizes what she’s doing.

D: Either Shelly finds him and stops him or she killed her husband and is going to prison for no reason.

E: This “first victim” we’ve assumed is dead (classic serial killer lore, a la Silence of the Lambs) is not dead at all. She’s his ultimate target, he’s doing all this for her attention.

F: We think she’s the mother of his first victim, but actually she’s HIS mother. It’s not revenge, it’s something else.

G: Shelley literally stabs Eric in the back.

H: End of act two (ish) we think she’s almost upon Eric and will get there in time to save the most recent target he’s closing in on, but no – she was almost upon First Girl’s house (that’s when we’ll learn she isn’t dead.)

I: Amazing roles for an elderly female, a late 30’s male, and another male as the cop who figures all this out. (I want Jeffrey Donovan for him!!!)

[JV Vasquez]

Jon V. 10 most interesting things

4. LESSON# 4 CREATE VILLAIN TRACK HOMEWORK
ASSINGMENT

I’ve learned to work more deeply on the villain character, personality, and motives to do evil.

A. Hero’s evil plan to annihilate the hero:
IT IS PRE-EXISTING
Envious-jealous, Jayten has been hiding his plan to destroy JV, he envies his special soul, and that he became Joshuel’s protégé. Since he was a kid he envies JV. He plans to destroy his unique soul ambush him in Gabilia making him believe his friend, best interest in him so JV fully trust him, the audience doesn’t know, know body knows.

B. How many ways the villain attacks/destroys the hero? Through mental, spiritual, Nephilim’s demons, Gabilians. Fighting Him, Sends Apollyon, the scorpions locusts, and Leviathan.

C. He’s extremely smart, he outwit the hero, he is FAST, Suttle and easy going, he is very seductive, and deceitful. Persuasive, he loves playing with his mind, very convincing, putting imaginary thoughts in him, he is very deceptive, he tricks JV, and everybody into who he really is. Jayten has the whole world at his disposal, the armies, the governments, the economic system, and religion On his side.

D. Fitting end, for villain where they pay for what his done. He is sent to the lake of fire and or the bottomless pit by JV alive to burn in eternal hell.

VERSION 1 VILLIAN TRACK: ULTIMATE SOUL
VILLAIN: Jayten, a bestial murderer who acts as an international social political activist obsessed with power. To
control the entire world.

HERO: JV, a lone wolf depressed man.

VILLAIN TRACK LABELS:
1. MISTAKE: He wants to gain power, control, to gain world dominion, he bribes ,and kills several of his people. He disguises himself as a peaceful political social activist to gain popularity among the people.

2. EMOTIONAL WOUND/TRAUMA:
Jayten wants to destroy JV, since he ridiculed him 21 years ago, in school in public in several occasions, he out smarted him, in class, he for beat him during a basketball game. He became very jealous, envious, extremely angry, full resentment of JV’s super talents.

3. REVAIL:
He Invoked, and consulted with his demons, to attack, persecute JV, he asked his rich senator dad to have JV be thrown out of school indefinitely.

4. BETRAIL/AMBUSH:
Jayten betrays his mentor dad-like Joshuel, and ambushes JV in Gabilia. We don’t know that yet, the audience neither that Jayten is a sold out. [ this is a twist for later]
5. ATTACKS:
Jayten sends Throne, power, and principality to kill JV.

6. GABILIA BATTLE:
Joshuel, Thally, commander, Mrs. Blue, and crick embark to Gabilia to battle the Gabilians, and get JV out. (In their spaceships.)

7. BIG TWIST:
JV meets with Jayten for help, Jeyten confronts JV, with envy, remorse, and jealousy, brings reveal from the past. They argue, fight intensely, and JV takes off Jayten mask, is the Devil’s face himself in him.

8. KIDNAPS:
JV’s daughter Celisha is kidnaped to Sheol to sacrifice her soul to Apollyon to gain more authority, and power through the locusts scorpions.

9. REVEALS TO THE WORLD:
Jayten announces his authoritarian one NWO government to the world on TV. He seats on his throne at the newly built 3rd temple mount, claims he’s God on earth.

10. THE HOSTAGE:
Thally tries to save Celisha, and Jayten sets up Thally up, and captures her as a hostage in turn for Joshuel, and Uzura kingdom to give up its forces.

11. CALAMIDY:
Jayten destroy, the world economy, skyrockets food prices costs, causing food scarcity, sets the beast chip, who can buy or sell. Millions die of hunger. Causes pestilences, more millions die. Millions are killed in wars caused by Jeyten.

12. MARTYRDOM/PERSECUTION:
Orders his military troops to kill the saint mortal souls, Apollyon wakes up underground scorpion demons to torture with venom the masses.

13. FINAL DEATH:
In a hard brutal battle between Uzura and Gabilia kingdoms, JV sends Jayten, to the lake of fire and brimstone with the help of along his team mates allies.