Lesson 5 Assignment & Feedback

[Farrin Rosenthal]

Hi all,

I’m ready to exchange scripts for feedback.

Farrin’s Vision: To do what it takes to become a highly paid
A-List Hollywood writer whose produced movies will
entertain audiences around the world.

Title: TRAPPED

<div>Written By: Farrin Rosenthal</div>

Genre: Thriller

Concept: Claustrophobic and trapped in an underwater grave for stealing $3.6 billion in Bitcoin from the Russian mob, a Los Angeles retail store manager has just 60 minutes to prove his innocence and save his family.

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[Joseph McGloin]

Still looking for an exchange partner, Farrin?

[Tracy Lawson]

Hi Joseph,

I’ll exchange with you when you’re ready.

Tracy

tracy.s.lawson@gmail.com

[Micki Hess]

I will be working on the script to catched up.

I will seek feedback after module 7.

[Tracy Lawson]

Hi! I’m ready to swap scripts for feedback.

REVOLUTIONARY ANNA is a period drama based on a true story. 29-year-old Anna Stone makes a daring solo journey to Valley Forge with
supplies for her husband…and ends up saving the American Revolution!

tracy.s.lawson@gmail.com

[Eclipse Neilson]

would you like to exchange?

[Tracy Lawson]

Hi Eclipse,

Yes, I would! My email is tracy.s.lawson@gmail.com

[Eclipse Neilson]

mine is eclipsfey@aol.com

made a mistake on the other one.I sent it.

[Eclipse Neilson]

I am ready for an exchange. But have to admit I am not good at horror.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH Genre: (mystical /drama Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity- knowing that time is running out.

[Veleka Gray]

Hi, Cheryl,

I did not get today’s lesson on feedback On the call Hal said we could find that lesson on the forums, but I cannot find it. I see “Lesson 5 Assignment & Feedback”, but there is no lesson. Where is it?

Veleka

[Eclipse Neilson]

go to Home and then to WIM classes and then to mod 2nd draft. it is posted there.

[Joseph McGloin]

Hi Veleka. Haven’t seen you since – was it Proseries 41 or MSC 5? Anyway, are you ready for an exchange?

Joe

[Eclipse Neilson]

ok and mine is eclipsfey@aol.com

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[Rebecca Sukle]

Greetings,

I am ready to exchange feedback. Please message me if you are interested.`

Title: Ragman’s War

Genre: action/drama

Based on a true story

Concept: A haunted World War 1 Citation Star veteran, must, without detection, execute the rabid police commander who violently dominates their community to prevent the massacre of men, women, and children working a picket line.

[Andrew Kelm]

Hi Rebecca

I would like to exchange.

FATEMONGERS — drama — a psychic with a blind spot for abusive men uses subtle manipulations to murder a sexual predator who seduces her to get to her sons.

email: ndrwkelm@gmail.com

[Eclipse Neilson]

I am still looking for two more writers to exchange. If you are ready now to exchange please send and the first to arrive will be my first exchange. I am free all day to work on the scripts. Thanks my email is eclipsfey@aol.com

THE NUN AND THE WITCH Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity knowing that time is running out for all.

[Andrew Kelm]

on its way

[Eclipse Neilson]

Thanks Andrew mine will be on its way in a few hours.

[Leona Heraty]

I’m catching up on my script, so I won’t be seeking feedback this time around.

I look forward to exchanging feedback on Module 7.

[Rebecca Sukle]

Rebecca’s Script Exchange 1: Helpful suggestions and changes made.

Rebecca’s Script Exchange 2: Excellent helpful suggestions and major changes made. I learned to focus. My page count now reduced to proper size.

Gratitude to my feedback partners for their help.

[John Trimbach]

John T’s Script Exchange 1

Title: Terminal

Written By: John Trimbach

Email address: johntrimbach@gmail.com

Genre: thriller

Concept: An airline captain is pursued by a FBI agent who suspects he is a serial killer because all the murders happen when he’s nearby.

Anyone interested please email!

Script:

[Jeff Chase]

Just sent you an email.

From: Jeff Chase

[Jane Turville]

I got a bit behind and have done several passes through the script. I will gladly exchange feedback with anyone but I think this particular lesson’s ship has sailed as I’ve been doing the assignments for Module 7 while doing this rewrite. But, if anyone is interested, sing out!

[Lori Lance]

If anyone is interested in exchanging feedback, let me know.