Lesson 5 Assignment & Feedback

[Margaret]

Is anyone ready to exchange Scripts? I have a Faith-based Fantasy/Drama. Margaret Silebi

[Lenore]

WIM Module 6, Lesson 5

Lenore Bechtel Script Exchange 1

My vision: I want to create enough salable screenplays that an agent will want to market my work and recommend me for writing assignments.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that feedback from a fellow writer is very valuable.

My first exchange was with Lloyd Shellenberger, and it was my privilege to give him suggestions about his “Letter from Baghdad,” which tells a story that needs to be told.

He gave me excellent suggestions for additions to my “Berlin Rendezvous,” and I am now in the process of putting them in my script. We’re also had a few telephone conversations, encouraging each other through this second of the four draft process.

When I finish the second draft, I hope to give and get feedback again.

[Lloyd Shellenberger]

Working Hard every day to become the best writer I can be and as a result I do become the best writer in Hollywood.

Module 6 Lesson 5 Feedback

I had the privilege of reading Lenore’s script. It brought back great memories of my time in Berlin. More importantly, she gave me excellent advice and feedback and showed me several errors in my formatting. Lenore is an excellent writer and devoted to her craft and I am hopeful her script is picked up. Thank you, Lenore, for your advice.

[Margaret]

Margaret’s Script Exchange 1

To be the best faith-based screenwriter.

Received feedback from a past WIM student since there wasn’t anyone else available at the time. Feedback led to major changes with my intro.

[Margaret]

Margaret’s Second round with Lenore. Thank you Lenore for your valuable feedback!

[H. Vince]

H. Vince’s Script Exchange 1

WIM Module 6 – 2023

Lesson 5: Exhange Feedback on Draft 2

Hi Everyone! Anyone interested in exchanging with me? 😃

TITLE: DREAM VACATION

WRITTEN BY: H. Vince

GENRE: DRAMA/THRILLER

HIGH CONCEPT: When a retired couple finally take their dream vacation, the husband starts showing signs of rapid dementia and leaves his wife in distress in a foreign country.

MAJOR STORY HOOK: Imagine thinking you can trust your doctor to prescribe you something to block your anxiety and instead you become a guinea pig for a clinical trial drug that causes extreme memory loss while you’re in a foreign country on a dream vacation experiment!?

[Margaret]

Hi, Vince! If you still need someone to review your script, I can exchange with you. Margaret

[H. Vince]

Hi Margaret!

I’m sorry. I just saw your message. For some reason I am not receiving all e-mail notifications even though I marked the box “Notify me of replies via email”. I will message you with my e-mail address.

Thank you!

[Marguerite Langstaff]

Module 6 Lesson 5 exchange feedback

Marguerite Langstaff: THE BILLIONAIRE IN 501

VISION: I want to learn to write and market movie scripts.

What I learned…I learned that I have gotten too far behind in my lessons and classes to have feedback with anybody and do it justice. That is a loss for me, but I am behind in the course. I moved this month and was unable to do any of the lessons. That is a reason and not an excuse. Actually it’s a true confession thing. I had to prioritize and am still rather caught up in the move and am still behind. My goal is to catch up with the rest of my class!

I love…no, actually I do not love being behind and knowing there will be a lot of work to catch up…but I do love that I intend to catch up with my lessons.

[H. Vince]

H. Vince’s Script Exchange

WIM Module 6 – 2023

Lesson 5: Exchange Feedback on Draft 2

My Vision: I will be a professional screenwriter.

Margaret took the time to read over my script and provide feedback. Thank you Margaret!

TITLE: DREAM VACATION

WRITTEN BY: H. Vince

GENRE: DRAMA/THRILLER

HIGH CONCEPT: When a retired couple finally take their dream vacation, the husband starts showing signs of rapid dementia and leaves his wife in distress in a foreign country.

MAJOR STORY HOOK: Imagine thinking you can trust your doctor to prescribe you something to block your anxiety and instead you become a guinea pig for a clinical trial drug that causes extreme memory loss while you’re in a foreign country on your dream vacation!?

[Brian Bull]

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The ONE THAT GOT AWAY – A Fisherman’s Tale
A fisherman is determined to catch the fish he blames for his younger brother’s death, however, in the end, it turns out the fisherman is the one who had gotten away.

ASSIGNMENT

Exchange feedback with at least one other writer, then rewrite your script to improve it.
1. Post your request to exchange feedback in the Module 6 forums under Lesson 5 and/or respond to another writer who has posted their request.

LOOKING to EXCHANGE FEEDBACK if anyone is available.

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• This reply was modified 1 year, 6 months ago by  Brian Bull.