Lesson 7

[Hiram Taylor]

Hiram Taylor LESSON #7 Monster Reveal Track:

What I learned doing this assignment is that by the time I get through these lessons, this screenplay is going to write itself.
MONSTER REVEAL TRACT
1: Create each part of this model:

A: What is your Monster and what is its terror?
1.: My monster is a VOICE that takes over the victim’s mind reminding the person of some horrible crime they have committed yet gotten away with.
2. Its terror is that it is relentless and will not stop until the person kills themself.
3. It POWERS are the ability to bend a victim’s mind into hysteria and speak their crimes.
4. LIMITATIONS: It has no body, no form, only a voice. It cannot kill the person, it can only drive the person mad so the person kills himself.
5. WEAKNESSES: It cannot stop, it goes from one victim to the next relentlessly. It has no compassion. It only has its mission.
6. PLAN: To drive every murderer insane so they kill themself and are brought to justice.

PURPOSE: Justice to the guilty. APPETITE: Never ceases to hunt guilty murderers who have gotten away with their crimes.

REVEALS/CLUES
B. Sequence of reveals:

FIRST REVEAL: Monk kills himself screaming “Get out of my mind!”
FIRST CLUE: The monster has some way of controlling a person’s mind.
SECOND REVEAL: 2nd monk is awakened at night by a voice. He sees no monster, only its voice.
SECOND CLUE: It has no body. It is not a person. It is otherworldly.
THIRD REVEAL: When the 3rd monk hears the voice he is surrounded by a group but only he can hear it.
THIRD CLUE: While the monster is driving the 3rd monk insane, the shock and reactions of the other monks causes the Monster to laugh. It has a sense of humor and it enjoys torturing humans.
FOURTH REVEAL: The voice goes into all the monks minds at once causing panic and mayhem.
FOURTH CLUE: It can control more than one mind at a time, therefore it can cause them to work against each other.
FIFTH REVEAL: It laughs while throwing snowballs at the monks
FIFTH CLUE: If it can throw snowballs it can throw other things like maybe a knife.
SIXTH REVEAL: It terrorizes the cook with a butcher knife but it does not kill him.
SIXTH CLUE: It cannot kill a person. I must force them to kill themselves. Therefore there is hope to escape it by controlling your mind not to listen to it.
SEVENTH REVEAL: It is clever and can lie (a weakness against its purpose). When it turns two monks against each other forcing a showdown between the two, when the young one shoots the other one, the monster realizes the boy is innocent and has never killed before, but now he is a murderer and kills himself. The monster has regret and remorse over the innocent boy.
CLUE: It has human qualities after all.
REVEAL EIGHT: It cannot torture the scared protagonist but he has never murdered or harmed anyone, he is an innocent who sought shelter in a snowstorm.
CLUE EIGHT: The protagonist cannot kill the monster but he can escape it.
LAST REVEAL: The monster is the Invisible Man, a scientist whose family was murdered and he was convicted of the crime and executed, but the electricity did not kill him it made him invisible turning him into a monster called the MINDBENDER.
LAST CLUE: He cannot die, he cannot kill. He is Justice. And only torments murderers.

[Aaron Clow]

Aaron’s Monster Reveal Track

What I learned doing this assignment is…This was the most difficult assignment so far, mostly because my monster is still somewhat vague. My initial run had a bigfoot in this monster role, but I think the changelings fit more in with old folklore. I’m not putting this in my outline just yet as I want to spend one more day with it. I just want to post it in case I end up moving past it. I don’t want to get stuck, and this is the point in the process where I’d normally get stuck and give up and not finish the course. So this is me trying to keep moving on my story. That’s what I learned. It’s better to progress your story and idea using the guidelines than to adhere to the homework 100%.

Who is the monster and what is their terror? The monster is a “Taker,” a half supernatural, half-physical creature who can take over a person’s mind temporarily. It is humanoid, acts on instinct to protect.

Powers: Can appear to manipulate matter in limited ways to confuse people at first, but this is actually not altering reality, but controlling a mind – it focuses mostly on nature changes because that is what it knows. It can create a field where there was forest, put old growth forest where there was a field. It can create limited illusions of manmade things that it could see within the zone of the preserve, such as a railroad depot that was nearby centuries ago but that is not there now. Our characters start to realize that the past is the key to the present – that if they study what was around the area for the past 600 years, they will understand more about how the creature works and what it has seen that it uses to confuse its prey.

Limitations: If you stop being able to concentrate, or stop fighting and recite a mantra of almost any kind and can hold it, you can combat the creature’s mind-altering effects.

Weaknesses: People’s minds are aware when they are being taken, so they have memory of the monster and of what it saw.

Plan/Purpose/Appetite: To make people terrified to enter the preserve, and if they don’t get the message, they will be killed

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[Selma Ahmed]

Selma: Monster Reveal Track
What I have learned…I found the information being given to the audience so difficult, such a struggle, but I know that ultimately it will make or break my script… I also kept fining myself making changes in the story to make the monster’s impact more powerful.
1. Who is your monster and what is their terror?
1. MONSTER:
Think about who your monster is in the END OF THE MOVIE and answer these questions:
Who or what the is the monster?
What are its powers? Elizabeth has the ability to travel through time and space. She has witch powers.

What are its limitations? Her purpose is flawed. She is evil, not good and Martha is good. When Martha recognises this, she is able to challenge Elizabeth at her own game: good with evil.

What are its weaknesses? Jennet, the daughter who denounced her. It hurts her to the core of her being that her own daughter did this. Martha calls on Jennet’s spirit to save her daughter.

What is its Plan/Purpose/Appetite? Elizabeth wants to change history. She sees herself as a victim of injustice and wishes to change historical events. She is misguided as she is truly evil, she believes she is innocent.

Who or what the monster is: Elizabeth was one of the Pendle witches, hung in Lancashire, England 1612, denounced by her own daughter. She feels she been wronged. She is still stupefied that her very own child would do that to her – and watch her hanged. Jennet showed no mercy. Now it’s time for payback.

2. SEQUENCE:
Create an order that the information will be delivered to the audience.
Start at the beginning with us knowing nothing about the monster and end with us knowing enough to stop or destroy the monster. There will be some clues that obviously go in front of others. But some clues could actually be anywhere in the script.
Just pick some kind of order and list them. You can change the order at any time.
Opening/prologue: Start the mystery of the monster by showing us the result of their violence.
1. Reveal 1 Angel gives Grandmother a relic a piece of wood from one of the Pendle hanging poles she picked up as a birthday present, celebrating the grandmother’s ancestry. The Grandmother tells the story of the Pendle witches and, along with the piece of wood, Angel talks about being a ‘wood witch,’ brings out her tarot card etc… Elizabeth is awakened.

2. Richard plays a convincing prank on the group.
During 1st Act: Foreshadowing as clues
3. Reveal 2 But…some sort of mysterious force…things moving, the air changing, sound of crying occurs. The group think Richard is joking with the group.
4. Martha finds clues around the house which she finds worrying.
5. Power cut. Candles lit.
6. Reveal 3 Sinister force with a message given that the group will be spared if Jenny is sacrificed.
7. Richard messes around outside and thinks a prank is being played on him as the witch reveals herself.
8. Reveal 4 Richard is dead, hung in his bedroom…
1st Act turning point: Characters are locked into horror
9. Doors are locked, telephones don’t work.
• 1st half of 2nd Act: The monster is present, but hidden
10. Reveal 5 Angel tries to reverse what has happened with her cards, with spells. Trying to figure out how to destroy Elizabeth. It just makes the witch more powerful and angry.
11. Midpoint: Monster is worse than we thought:
12. Reveal 6 Jenny is almost caught ( but the witch couldn’t go through with transporting her into 1612…)
2nd half of 2nd Act: Monster pursuing / attacking characters, delivering clues with each attack

13. Clue that this is an unhappy mother, jealous of the happy family, distressed that she was wronged.
ACT 2
14. 14. Reveal 6 Grandmother. Burnt to death (foreshadows the only way Elizabeth can be killed).
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16. Tony tries to kill the witch head on, is caught and tied down onto the kitchen table.
17. Martha tries to reason with the witch.
18. 2nd half of 2nd Act: Monster pursuing / attacking characters, delivering clues with each attack
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20. Reveal 6: Martha realises the witch can’t take Jenny without her mother:
21. Midpoint: Witch tortures Tony Drawing and quartering.
22. There is a struggle and Angel tries to save Martha and Jenny using her ‘witch powers’ which obviously don’t work. Is beheaded.
23. Martha and Jenny huddle together, hiding.
ACT 3
Characters solve the puzzle and fight back, apparently killing monster
24. Full pursuit by the killer: The witch is after the child, tries to kill the mother.
25. Reveal 7 The witch finds them. They Fight to the death. Martha tries to burn her
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27. …but she gets caught in her burning gown as they get transported to 1612.
28. The thrilling escape from death: they are alive in 1612.
29. We can see the nine Pendle accused on Gallows hill. The real Elisabeth is taken to the noose.
30. Martha and Jenny watch in horror.
31. Reveal 8: Elizabeth cries out to her daughter to tell the truth. It’s heart-breaking – and we feel empathy for her. Suddenly, Elizabeth the witch is pulling at Jenny – and there is a race to replace the real Elizabeth with Jenny.
32. The two mothers fight it out. Time is running out…the real Elizabeth must be hung.
33. Reveal 9 Martha dies, strangled just in that moment that Elizabeth is hung – and Jenny disappears, returning to the present.: Martha seems to have kill the witch but has to die in the process.
Resolution: Survivors live…but somehow, the monster is still alive for the sequel
34. In the present. Jenny is alone in the house.
35. She has turned into a witch…and wants to revenge on Elizabeth’s soul…