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Lesson 7
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What I learned doing this assignment is that we must have some good hooks embedded in our synopsis. I always fear I’m not conveying the essence of my stories when writing a synopsis, so I really hate them. Hopefully I’m learning how to improve my synopsis writing.
Jack Young’s Query Letter for “STREAM”
Title: STREAM
Written by Jackie Young
Genre: SciFi / Fantasy
I have bad news and bad news. 1) In less than 100 years the human race will become extinct. 2) You must die to stop it.
Michael Walker wants to be a good husband. This would be true except for the fact that he just ended an affair with his secretary at work and has just lost his job and family savings in an illegal inside-trader stock deal. Oh, and his business partner who supplied the insider trading info just flipped on him at the local FBI headquarters office. Any minute now, the FBI will show up with an arrest warrant for Michael. It’s no wonder his terrible migraines have worsened
As he tries to find his way through a minefield of personal and professional problems, a no-birth epidemic looms over everyone on the planet. But as if things seem they can’t get any worse, he’ll soon discover that he may be mankind’s only hope to end the current no-birth epidemic.
Supernatural events lead him towards the Professor, a man that may have the answers to what is causing the epidemic and why Michael must die to stop it. Professor Darlington theorizes that an unusual energy stream in the astral plane is stealing all of the souls from our planet. Shunned by the scientific community as a lunatic. The Professor and his team have developed a method to send a man into the energy stream.
There are two choices for Michael — die from brain cancer in less than 3 days…OR submit to having his heart stopped to save the world.
Oh, forgot to mention, the second option hurts like Hell.
Comparisons: Think “Children of Men” meets “Star Gate” meets “Flatliners”
BIO: I wrote, executive produced, and co-produced “Love Wine”, a romantic comedy released on NetFlix. Additional credits include “The Darkening”, a suspense/horror film (2012) that I wrote, executive produced, produced, directed, and distributed, which had a limited theatrical release by Rave Cinema. I have authored over forty original screenplays in all genres. I am currently managed by Hakim Mulraine of New York, NY and worked on a paid rewrite of a screenplay adaptation of the book, “The Island Calls”.
If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the Pitch Bible and pilot episode.
CONTACT: Jackie Young, 1327 Drexel Street, Omaha, NE 68107, PH: 402-731-7037, EMAIL: jackyoung1981@cox.net
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Eric Humble’s Query Letter
What I learned doing this assignment is: that I was able to streamline the synopsis even further than before in order to highlight the biggest hooks and convey the structure of the pilot and series.
Hi _______________,
I enjoyed the concept of your project __________, and thought you might be interested in my one-hour thriller series BLOOD APOTHECARY.
Title: BLOOD APOTHECARY
Genre: 1 hour thriller series
History is shaped by disease, and they decide who gets the cure.
Jude discovered the cure for cancer 12 years ago… and hasn’t been allowed to speak of it since. It’s always been easier to accept another cushy promotion than push back against the Big Pharma company’s plan to hold out on his discovery until the “right time.” But when his wife is diagnosed with inoperable cancer, Jude becomes frantic to get his discovery into production. That’s when he stumbles onto…
…The Conclave, a secret society who shape human history by suppressing cures.
Their next target is Dres, a homeless con artist who also happens to be 100 years older than she looks. Dres hails from a race of immortals whose DNA holds the key to curing all diseases. Jude needs her for his cure. The Conclave needs her killed. To keep her safe and make his cure, Jude will have to infiltrate them… but the initiation rite is a fight to the death.
Can he become a killer to save millions?
If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the pilot script and bible.
Sincerely,
Eric Humble
484-716-9700
BIO: Eric Humble has interviewed healthcare providers, National Institute of Health researchers, and drug trial administrators to create this series bible. His screenplays have placed in numerous contests.
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