Lesson 7

[Deborah Stenard]

DEB STENARD’S LESSON 7- MONSTER REVEAL TRACK-

What I learned in doing this assignment is:

The writer/filmmakers of THE THING obviously know these steps. I am a big fan of the original THING movie from the 50’s. This one scared the crap out of me. I still have to make my monster scarier, but the section A. WHO IS YOUR MONSTER AND WHAT IS THEIR TERROR is a huge help in pushing me to think beyond the ordinary.

ASSIGNMENT 2

Take these steps to create your Monster Reveal Track.

1. Create each part of this model:

A. Who is your monster and what is their terror?

My monster is a DOOMSDAY PREPPER pushed over the edge by his fears and when he contracts an extremely potent strain of rabies

Powers?

He can hunt, shoot, had expert woodsman skills, in perfect shape. Has lost all fear due to the rabies infecting his

Limitations?

Hasn’t been off the mountain in years and cannot function around people

Weaknesses?

He cannot tolerate water, not even the sound of it. He has developed Laryngospasm and makes howling noises due to spasms in his throat

Plan/Purpose/Appetite?

To kill anyone who tries to throw him off his land.

ACT 1- SET UP FOR HORROR

ATMOSPHERE OF EVIL ESTABLISHED:

(WE NEVER SEE THE ACTUAL FACE OF THE MAN, AS HIS GOGGLES AND NECK GAITER OBSCURE IT)

A weird local is hunting in the woods with night vision goggles. He finds a den of baby raccoons and is in the act of taken them out of the nest when the mother attacks him with savage ferocity. The raccoon is foaming at the mouth as it bites the hunter over and over again. He finally manages to kill it. He takes it home, cooks it and eats it. The bite marks from the animal appear red and infected.

CONNECT WITH THE CHARACTERS:

Billionaire Developer orders his second-in-command to get two young women from the company to accompany the two men on a weekend at

the new development before it is open to the public.

1^st REVEAL

As the Billionaire and his group drive up the road to the development, they see dead animals eviscerated and displayed as warning signs along the way. The size of the animal gets bigger and bigger as they drive up the road. They speculate as to who would have done such a revolting thing.

THE CHARACTERS ARE WARNED NOT TO DO IT:

After being stopped by al yokel deputy before driving up to the hotel, the group are warned that a local man is angry at the fence that was built around the development because it cuts off access to his family lands. The Billionaire hires the yokel to be the Security Guard for the weekend.

2^nd REVEAL

A lawyer meets the group at the newly erected “spite fence”. He has a lawsuit filed by an environmental group, in the name of the Doomsday Prepper- BOONE TOMPKINS. The billionaire asks to meet with Boone, to try and convince him to end the lawsuit, but the lawyer refuses to have anything to do with Boone, being terrified of him.

DENIAL OF HORROR:

The Second-in-Command says the ancestral land was legally taken by eminent domain and the angry local has no recourse except to take the billionaire to court- for the next 50 years. The angry local suddenly appears in front of their car, acting odd. His eyes roll in his head, and he drools. He demands the fence be taken down, screaming that the mere presence of a fence on the mountain is an insult, and the Billionaire and his hotel are an anathema to God. The group laughs at him and drive on.

SAFETY TAKEN AWAY:

When they get to the hotel, they realize that the gate cannot be closed, because the final code has not been loaded. Even though a giant iron fence with spikes on it, surrounds the property, they can either leave the gate open or shut it manually and contact someone to come fix the code and then open the gate. The Billionaire says to leave the gate open. They can call someone to come up and fix the electronics when they get to the hotel. Inside, they meet the Concierge, who will be their private servant for the weekend. She tells them that something is wrong with the private cell tower and there is no phone or internet service.

MONSTER: NATURE OF THE BEAST

After dropping off their bags, they go for exploring around the grounds.

They find a wolf hole- a pit trap with sharpened sticks in the bottom and in the pit is the electronic specialist who was supposed to add the code to lock the gate. He is very dead.

3^RD REVEAL

The group find the tiger pit near a stream with the body of the electrical technician impaled on sharpened sticks. Boone cannot approach the pit due to the sound of running water. His laryngospasms sound like barking and the group mistake him for a wild dog.

ACT 2 – THE POINT OF NO RETURN

ISOLATED/TRAPPED/ABDUCTED

After finding the dead man, the group wants to leave, but when they get to the gate, they find they are locked in. The Billionaire orders the local deputy to climb the fence and go for help.

4^th REVEAL

The security guard is ordered to try and climb the Spite Fence and go for help. Boone kills him with a crossbow and the group witnesses his body being hoisted by a sinister figure and thrust onto the iron spired on the fence. Crows come and feed on his body.

ONE OF US IS KILLED –

While trying to climb the fence, the deputy is hit by an arrow from a crossbow and impales himself on the fence and dies. The group race back to the hotel and lock themselves in.

MIDPOINT: THE MONSTER IS WORSE THAN WE THOUGHT!

FULL PURSUIT BY THE KILLER

The Concierge tries to take charge, because she has been at the hotel for weeks and knows all the nooks and crannies. But the Billionaire and his Second-in-Command refuse to let an old woman be in control.

The Concierge grabs the girls and takes them to a place of safety. The two men feel two against one is good odds, so they make plans to hunt the killer and they head to the kitchen to look for weapons.

TERRORIZED

The two men out of their depth. The second-in-Command tries to fight off the Killer but hasn’t got the strength to hold him off. The Billionaire runs away to leave the second-in-command to his fate. The Killer forces his head into a boiling hot fry-o-later.

5^th REVEAL

The Billionaire and the Second in Command try to fight off the killer in the darkened kitchen. The killer forces the head of the S-in-C into the hot oil fryer. By the fire that bubbles up as the oil spills, we finally see the partial face of the monster with staring eyes and slavering mouth.

ACT 3- FULL OUT HORROR

FIGHT TO THE DEATH-

The Billionaire stumbles through the hotel, trying to escape the killer.

He is found by the Concierge, who drags him into the safe room where she is hiding with the girls. The Billionaire wants to go to the woods, because he thinks they’ll have a better chance to get away down the mountain. He convinces the one of the girls to go with him by promising her money if they manage to escape.

HYSTERIA- The Billionaire and one girl try to leave. They are sneaking through the hotel, when the girl is grabbed from behind, not by the killer, but by the second-in-command, dying in excruciating pain from his burns. The girls has a panic attack. She grabs a (HEAVY OBJECT NOT SURE WHAT!) and beats the burned man to death with it. He dies and she is sobbing. The Billionaire tries to shut her up, but the killer stumbles upon to them and bites the girl in the throat to make her stop screaming.

6^th REVEAL

We finally see the full face of the monster. He grabs the first girl from behind and moves in as if he is going to kiss her neck. In reality, he tears out her throat with his teeth.

The Billionaire falls into the koi pond in the middle of the lobby. The sight of water causes the Killer to foam uncontrollably at the mouth and run away. The Billionaire runs back to the Concierge and the last girl and tells them what happened.

THE THRILLING ESCAPE FROM DEATH-

The Concierge realizes that the killer is suffering from Rabies and probably doesn’t have long to live, since he is exhibiting symptoms of acute hydrophobia and hallucinations. The Concierge and the girl decide to set a fire and hope that the authorities will see it and come up to put it out. They grab anything burnable from the hotel and pile it in the driveway and set it on fire. They soon hear helicopters coming to check out the flames. The Billionaire is furious that the women are burning priceless works of art. He grabs a water hose and attempts to put the fire out. The killer appears from hiding, grabs the Billionaire and throws him into the bonfire.

DEATH RETURNS TO TAKE ONE MORE-

The Concierge turns the water full on to the Killer, which causes him to foam at the mouth and die.

The helicopters circle the fire and see the last girl attempting to throw the Killer’s body onto the fire to make sure he is dead. The authorities, not knowing what she is trying to do, shoot her and she falls into the fire with the killer.

RESOLUTION-

The Concierge is the only one left. She is leaving with the few belongings. She is heading for the police car waiting to drive her away. She hears a strange noise. She turns to see another raccoon lurching towards her, stiff gate and foaming at the mouth. She screams.

[Tony Scott]

Tony J. Scott

Monster Reveal

The Thing is one of my alltime favorite horror films. 1982 and 2011. The 1982 version and Alien changed the world of horror. I was so happy for the prequel. I’m not sure if I’m doing the overlay correctly. What I learned is how to further list the sequence of events and this time its’ the revealing of the monster.

1. My monster is actually an outstanding member of the vampire community and serves as a Homicide Police Detective Reineer Davenport of the Atlanta Special Vampire Crimes Task Force. In the opening scene the Monster’s assistant is seen dragging the last remaining dead body of the victim group from years before. The Monster is present during the elevator scenes during the original abductions but because of his power of speed he is never really seen or remembered by the group.

A. He has the power of speed, super strength, good looks.

B. He has a weakness for the sun and special UV weapons used by humans. His popularity.

C. He is limited to only being able to operate outdoors when the sun is down or very cloudy days.

D. His plan is to drain the blood from the group without them knowing what is going on. He keeps them hopped up on LSD during certain intervals which also keep them from remembering what’s going on. The blood drive isn’t for him but for someone else who he feels needs it.

2. Sequence the reveals.

A. The monster is busy at work in the beginning but the audience never gets a good enough look at him.

B. He is revealed at the first funeral wake scene but the audience doesn’t know he’s the monster hiding in plain sight.

C. The monster assistant is revealed by accident and then begins flirting with Niki and hates on Derrick.

D. The first reveal of the monster comes during the fourth killing cycle.

E. Killing Malcolm at the basement window. Placing him in the chair.

F. Killing Det. Riley

G. Placing Det. Riley’s body in the basement chairs.

H. Realizing the plan isn’t working the monster decides to kill Niki.

I. Killing his own assistant.

J. Killing Niki as he gets shot to death by Derrick.

3. Create demand for each clue/reveal.

A. The group tries to figure out who, what, when and how of their situation.

B. The accidental dose leaves two of the group awake during the phase two of the fourth killing cycle.

C. The monster believes someone is awake that should be asleep.

D. Two of the group escapes. The chase in the basement.

E. The monster believes Det. Riley can hear screams for help coming from the basement.

F. The monster decides to call it quits and shuck his failing plan.

G. The monster assistant is bothered by what’s going to happen to Niki.

H. Derrick shows up with the shotgun.

Tony J’s BLOODSTREAM: HORROR SITUATION TRACK

What I learned is that this is very hard. I learned how to track the ups and downs and I hope I am doing this right.

ACT 1 SET UP FOR HORROR

· ATMOSPHERE OF EVIL ESTABLISHED:

The Opening scene cuts between the two settings. The lone person reading a eulogy at a wake service at a funeral parlor then cut to a dead body, drained of blood and prune like in appearance, being dragged away by its leg from a group of 6-8 empty surgical type bondage chairs. The person reading the eulogy is dressed the same as the body being dragged. It’s the same person.

10 YEARS LATER:

· CONNECT WITH THE CHARACTERS:

HORROR SITUATION:

The elevator they normally use to go to the tenth floor stops on floor six and thereby forced off the elevator to an adjoining building’s bridge detour and have to take a different elevator. Things really become harry when after pressing the up button it takes them straight down to an unlit, seemingly unsafe garage level.

REACTION:

Each group member tries to hurry back to the elevator before the doors close but is apprehended by the monster.

HORROR SITUATION:

One of the group decides to try not getting back on the elevator and heads for the daylight he sees. A chase pursues and just as he thinks he’s made it to the entrance the Monster’s assistant grabs him.

REACTION:

The victim runs and tries to hide under a car. When he thinks the coast is clear he runs for the entrance screaming and yelling for help but is caught.

ACT 2 – THE POINT OF NO RETURN

· ISOLATED/TRAPPED/ABDUCTED:

Each group member awakes in turn to discover they are in a dungeon type basement strapped to medical procedure type chairs and cannot move. They discover each other and the surroundings and begin the hallucinations back and forth from the basement to the funeral parlor. The discoveries continue until the monster begins to make mistakes. The group notices that the hallucinations happen in two phases. The first phase has the group returning to find the eulogy speaker asleep or unconscious and after returning the second time the eulogy reader is missing and or replaced with a new captive.

HORROR SITUATION:

Everyone who is shackled is screaming for help and trying to break free from the chairs.

REACTION:

The clock buzzes and begins the first LSD type trip to the funeral parlor for the first wake ceremony. They all file into the parlor passing by the funeral director/ monster and closed coffin before sitting. One of the group members stands and walks to the front to speak kindly of the departed.

HORROR SITUATION:

The group returns from the funeral parlor setting to find that one person of the group is unconscious and the group is unaware of anything. NOTE: The group is unaware that they have been asleep and don’t remember anything from the wake service.

REACTION:

They try to wake the group member up to ask if she knows anything. She never wakes up.

HORROR SITUATION:

The group returns to the funeral parlor, unable to move or speak except for the speaker. They watch as the speaker leaves the parlor of her own free will however they are still unable to move.

REACTION:

As the group returns to the basement they notice that the speaker is no longer among them. Her chair is empty. DENIAL- Not everyone in the group remembers the person. There is some denial that the chair was occupied. TRY TO SOLVE- They try to devise a plan to figure out what happened to her.

Rinse and repeat a few times until there are only four group members remaining. Each time they notice a member asleep when everyone else is awake but still no answers.

HORROR SITUATION:

They begin to notice that the clock is also a timer. One of them figures out that they are losing time. They begin to realize that they are missing 15-20 minutes every half an hour and that somehow the group is getting smaller. They hear chopping from a different room in the basement.

REACTION:

They agree to pay more attention to the time and each other. They figure out the time sequence and one of them notices a shoelace is untied. How? One of them remembers images from the funeral parlor. They all agree that they are like in two different places. They scream when they hear monster assistant mutilating a corpse.

HORROR SITUATION:

One of them notices that he has a free hand during the wake at the funeral parlor and is shocked. Back at the basement the monster’s assistant is moving the chairs and accidentally loosens the wrist strap on one of them.

REACTION:

ESCAPE ATTEMPT- Back in the basement one of them is able to free his hands from the strap. He knows that this is at the halfway phase and now is the time to escape.

HORROR SITUATION:

The group returns in time to observe the monster’s assistant securing the loose member to his chair.

REACTION:

What the group now thinks is the actual monster in charge is exposed. The assistant hones in on one of the group and makes it obvious his feelings for him/her. The group later realizes that they have a weapon to use to their advantage. Too late the buzzer sounds. He’s unconscious again. When they return he is fully bound again. But something has changed. The assistant is standing in front of the love interest fascinated. She/he flirts in return.

HORROR SITUATION:

The real monster calls to his assistant and startles the group.

REACTION:

They are all confused and decide that this flirty thing is their way out. The assistant no longer hides himself behind the walls and curtain when the buzzer sounds. He presses the remote as they look. The partially freed member remembers more images from the funeral parlor and shares what he remembers.

HORROR SITUATION:

Because of the mistake with the wrist strap the monster makes a mistake with the LSD mix and forgets to include the LSD mix in two of the group member’s saline I.V. drip. One of the two secretly awake coughs slightly but enough to make the monster aware that something is wrong. The monster tries to figure out who is awake before the buzzer sounds. The buzzer sounds as the monster approaches one of them but has to forego it because of the buzzer.

REACTION:

The two members play possum and witness everything the monster and his assistant do during the 15-20 minute trip including the final death and removal of the speaker. The monster sinks his teeth into the victim’s neck and drains any remaining blood.

· MONSTER:

Not the monster but the monster’s assistant chopping off body parts from the body that we saw dragged away in the opening scene. NOTE: They reposition each group after each one is taken away. The person speaking at the wake is removed.

ACT 3 – FULL OUT HORROR

· FIGHT TO THE DEATH:

The potion begins to lose its power over the group. No more trips to the funeral parlor. There are four remaining in the group.

HORROR SITUATION:

The straps begin to get loose enough for the two woke victims to free their hands and then their feet. One tries to free the wrist band on another but can’t. He wants to stay with the other one who is set on finding a way out.

REACTION:

The two left of the group members beg to be released but they are ignored. They both selfishly take off for what they think is freedom only to become lost and hunted in the monster’s house of horrors. It seems it’s every man for himself. They both find a basement window that leads to outside but the window is too high. Only one can escape.

HORROR SITUATION:

The monster and his assistant enter into the chair room and notice that two group members have escaped.

REACTION:

The monster takes off after them while the assistant inspects the two remaining members and scares them.

HORROR SITUATION:

One boosts the other to the window just as the monster finds them. He subdues the one and tries to subdue the other but he manages to scrape himself through the window. He turns to look back as the monster snaps the other’s neck.

REACTION:

The monster hears the doorbell ring to his house. The escaped group member watches from the bushes.

· HYSTERIA:

As they become free the other two still bound become hysterical, screaming, yelling for help, crying to be freed next.

The two decide to make a run for it hoping to find a way to escape.

THE THRILLING ESCAPE FROM DEATH

· The now dead group member is returned to his chair so the others can see him. The doorbell rings again. The monster leaves the kill room to go answer the door but forgets to close the soundproof basement door. At the door is Detective Riley.

HORROR SITUATION:

Det. Riley has a conversation with the monster, now identified as Det. Davenport about his recent absence from work. Det. Riley acts like he ignores the screams for help coming from the basement.

REACTION:

Det. Riley decides to leave without drawing suspicion but the monster grabs him and breaks his neck killing him. The monster drags Det. Riley’s body to the basement to the chopping room.

HORROR SITUATION:

The escaped member calls the police from Det. Riley’s car but isn’t sure if the call went through.

REACTION:

The escaped member grabs a shot gun that contains ultra violet bullets. He crawls back and jumps down from the open basement window.

DEATH RETURNS TO TAKE ONE OR MORE

HORROR SITUATION:

The monster places Det. Riley’s body next to the female member. He releases the straps on her chair. He bights into her neck and kill her.

HORROR SITUATION:

The monster attempts to kill the second female in the same manner.

REACTION:

The monster assistant prevents the monster from killing her. They both fight. The monster kills his assistant by tearing his head from his shoulders.

HORROR SITUATION:

The monster goes for the girl again who has been trying to crawl away. He picks her up to bight her again.

REACTION:

We hear a loud shot gun blast from behind the monster. Derrick notices Niki’s heart in the Monster’s clenched fist just as he pulls the trigger. Niki’s body drops lifelessly to the floor as the monster disintegrates into ashes and flame sparkles.

The lone survivor walks up the stairs through the front door and is rescued by the police who arrive just in time.

[Brian King]

Brian King’s Monster Reveal

What I learned… I’m astonished by the unexpected depth and richness that emerged as I expanded the story, incorporating a complicit sheriff and drawing inspiration from Blade Runner. This assignment has brought forth two startling and intriguing elements that enhance the narrative and provide a deeper understanding of the villain. It feels like a positive development, and I’m excited about the newfound complexity it brings to the story.

<u style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>ASSIGNMENT 1:

Watch the movie THE THING. I was riveted by this remake of the early tale. I love it when the filmmakers keep guessing the villain… And I loved the ambiguous ending.

ASSIGNMENT 2

Take these steps to create your Monster Reveal Track.

> Who is your monster and what is their terror? A failed man of medicine who operates a mortuary. He carries the zombie gene/DNA giving him the ability to infect humans and turn them into zombies. His terror

>Powers: The ability to turn humans into zombies. He can control and manipulate the actions of his zombie experiments and command them to carry out his bidding.

Limitations: He operates in secrecy, hiding his experiments, and staying alive until he can find a self-cure. Time is running out. He’s found a zombiism antidote, but it contains limitations (doesn’t last long, only works some of the time, adverse effects). Father requires a fresh supply of human flesh to continue his research and sustain his zombie creations. This dependency limits his actions and forces him to seek out new victims discreetly.

>Weaknesses: Time is not on his side, as Zombiism is slowly eating away at his brain… heart, and soul. His humanity outweighs his zombie side (but for how long). Zombiism is eating his brain, destroying his soul. The longer he remains in his current state, the more his humanity fades away. He battles a Jekyll and Hyde existence, struggling with the ethical and moral implications of his actions, internal conflicts, and doubts.

Plan: To find a cure for zombiism, using his condition for a diabolical deity-like purpose.

Sequence the reveals & Create Demand for each clue/reveal.

1. DEMAND: Prologue intrigue! Why did a woman deliberately walk into the path of a speeding vehicle, while screaming, “Take me, I won’t live like this.” Is she crazy or is she feeling some unknown hell, that only she can explain? Later the woman’s body appears to have been partially eaten.

MONSTER REVEAL: This is the mortuary diabolical, possessed, and/or cursed, that drives people insane… this needs proper setup.

2. DEMAND: The town demands that the sheriff visit the mortuary and get some answers. While there he discovers the owner’s secret lab/morgue.

MONSTER REVEAL: The mortician explains to the sheriff a flesh-eating zombie attacked the woman’s body.

3. DEMAND: The mortician demands that the sheriff find and destroy the zombies before it’s an epidemic.

MONSTER REVEAL: The mortician shows the sheriff proof of his experiment trying to cure zombies.

4. DEMAND: The sheriff demands that the mortician keeps this info to himself while he investigates (he doesn’t want to raise the town’s fears, lose his pension, and get fired before his upcoming retirement.

MONSTER REVEAL: Max, the monster’s assistant follows Mortician’s instructions to rob graves for more experiments.

5. DEMAND: Max infects bites on a newly deceased body.

5. MONSTER REVEAL: The body doesn’t survive – deteriorates; Mortician reveals the limitations of his zombie experiments. Zombies survive by eating human flesh, and Monster experiments go wrong. It wasn’t a zombie who killed and ate the body.

6. DEMAND: The sheriff demands that the Mortician perform an autopsy.

6. MONSTER REVEAL: Autopsy reveals that the dead one was not a zombie/ rare condition of cannibalism.

7. DEMAND: Paranoia/townies suspicious of friends, and family/demand cameras in the graveyard, everywhere.

7. MONSTER REVEAL: The only people who have been dying are those who attended the “woman’s funeral” /How did the monster get to them/coincidence or something worse? How did the monster pull it off?

8. DEMAND: Sheriff caught hiding evidence of zombies/ still trying to hide the problem

8. MONSTER REVEAL: Mortician demands that the sheriff bring him dead bodies, or he’ll reveal that the sheriff has been harboring zombies. Mortician, “Help me, or this town will be doomed, and so will you.”

9. DEMAND: The Sheriff brings more bodies to the Mortician.

9. MONSTER REVEAL: The corpse starts changing. They are no longer dying after consuming flesh.

10. DEMAND: The zombie problem is out of the sheriff’s control; he begs Mortician for help / we will all be infected / I must call for help.

10. MONSTER REVEAL: The mortician rewards the sheriff with death, and the sheriff returns as a zombie, doing the mortician’s bidding.

11. DEMAND: The town is crazed when the sheriff is seen wandering around dead, attacking people, and eating them.

12. MONSTER REVEAL: The links the sheriff to the mortician and wants him dead.

13. DEMAND: The daughter of the mortician is suspiciously unaffected by zombiism.

13. MONSTER REVEAL: The Mortician is seen eating dead flesh.

**

2. Lay that over your current outline and fill in each clue/reveal using the tag “Monster Reveal.”

Prologue: Wake up shock up.

A woman deliberately walks into the path of a speeding vehicle, screaming, “Take me, I won’t live like this.” Her body appears to have been partially eaten.

Intrigue is created as to why she took such extreme action and if there’s an unknown hell she was experiencing.

Mini-movie #1: Mother’s Funeral: A normal town

The town demands that the sheriff visit the mortuary and get answers.

The Sheriff discovers the owner’s secret lab/morgue.

The mortician explains to the sheriff that a flesh-eating zombie attacked the woman’s body.

The mortician demands that the sheriff find and destroy the zombies before it becomes an epidemic.

Mini-movie #2: Daughter’s Grief and Isolation: Daughter in denial that her mom is dead

The mortician hires a tela-psychiatrist for the daughter’s well-being.

Max, the mortician’s assistant, follows the mortician’s instructions to rob graves for more experiments.

Paranoia spreads among the townies, demanding cameras in the graveyard and everywhere.

The daughter remains unaffected by zombiism, raising suspicions.

Mini-movie #3: Discovering the Monster’s Secret / Hero tries to find out what’s going on

The mortician shows the sheriff proof of his experiment trying to cure zombies.

The mortician reveals the limitations of his zombie experiments and how they can go wrong.

Autopsy reveals that the dead woman was not a zombie but a victim of rare cannibalism.

The town wonders how the monster has been able to kill and eat people.

Mini-movie #4: Sheriff’s Desperation/Daughter has a plan/head-spinning twist.

The sheriff is caught hiding evidence of zombies, still trying to cover up the problem.

The mortician demands the sheriff bring him dead bodies, threatening to reveal the sheriff’s zombie cover-up.

The sheriff reluctantly brings more bodies to the mortician.

The corpses start changing, no longer dying after consuming flesh.

Mini-movie #5: Out of Control/The villain is more scary than anyone realized.

The zombie problem becomes too much for the sheriff to handle, and he begs the mortician for help.

The mortician rewards the sheriff with death, turning him into a zombie under his control.

The town is horrified when the sheriff is seen wandering around dead, attacking and eating people.

The mortician is seen eating dead flesh, further confirming his connection to the zombies.

Mini-movie #6: Daughter’s Awakening, her bigger bolder plan

The daughter realizes her father’s true nature and the danger she’s in.

The boyfriend reveals his true identity and his mission to stop the mortician.

The te-le-psychiatrist helps the daughter overcome her fear triggered by her mother’s death.

Mini-movie #7: Final Showdown:

The boyfriend fights with Max while the daughter confronts her father, but the father escapes.

The boyfriend gets bitten by Max before killing him, turning into the seventh death.

The daughter musters the courage to leave the mortuary and stumbles upon the sheriff’s dead body.

The mortician captures the daughter and explains his plan to create a human-zombie hybrid.

The te-le-psychiatrist is abducted, and the daughter witnesses it but is too afraid to help.

Mini-movie #8: The Birth of Horror/ the new normal

Nine months later, the daughter gives birth to a human-zombie hybrid, revealing the true extent of the mortician’s experiments

[William Curley]

Bill Curley Monster Reveal Track. What I Learned: “The Thing” really opened my eyes after watching it. Having seen this film and the original I now know how skillfully our lesson 7 was imbeded within the story. My monsters are actually two tiered within the story. Initially we see giant sized normally seen firest animals. The Monster size is dramatized to show that they are ” guardians” of an ancient sacred burial grounds for Native Americans. Later as my story unfolds the monsters become alien like and infinitely more deadly i.e. the ” Wendigos”, terrifying beasts of Indian lore. Opening Scene: Demand: Giant sized raccoons and porcupines accompany an Indian warrior and his son to a sacred burial site off limits until entry is approved by the “spirits. The father instructs his son of the importance of this bog and adjoining old growth forest. A warning is given. The large beasts are ” guardians” of ghis primal area. Reveal: The huge creatures appear and walk with both Native Americans. Inciting Incident in Act 1. Demand: Why has a surveyor not returned to a construction trailer after entering an ancient burial ground. Reveal: The young man has several huge porcupine quils slicing through his body. A last minute frantic description only heightens the intrigue. Key Incident Act 1 to Act 2. Several.members of a construction crew are found torn apart limb to limb in a sacred Indian burial site destined to be a Northwoods real estate development. Demand: Several members of a construction crew have gone missing. Reveal: Their remains are found in a bloodied pit of shredded body parts. Midpoint: Demand: Scary, alleged sightings of grotesque looking creatures. Reveal: Terrifing Indian lore monsters aka The ” Wendigos” exit an ancient burial site and surround a workplace trailer. Act 3. Demand. Townspeople hear a commotion and sounds of panic. Reveal: Horrifying beasts resembling a deer, devil and small dinosaur attack a small Wisconsin Northwoods community as an ancient Native American burial site was desecrated repeatedly despite a crescendo of warnings. End: Demand. Wholesale carnage is all that remains of a peaceful community. Reveal. National Guardsmen walk about a disaster area of dead bodies, exterminated monsters. The fight is over but with a huge cost. A lesson is sadly learned.

[Sunil Pappu]

Sunil Pappu’s Monster Reveal Track

“What I learned doing this assignment is…to identify the various components of my monster and create a demand for the reveals. I enjoyed watching THE THING and creating demand for my reveals.”

COMPONENTS OF THE MONSTER

• Powers: access our memories through our eyes and feed on them; especially attracted to blue LED lights from mobile devices, enormous eyes act as scanners that scan human eyes or any screen; they gouge out the eyes and empty the brain from the inside out; their sharp bladelike claws slice through bone and metal like butter that makes clicking sounds; it has an inner protective eyelid that is bulletproof; tentacles like fibre optic cables burst out of their protruding bellies to grab their victim and devour them, the tentacles act as both signal transmitters and receivers; they are alive as long as they have memories to feed on; they recharge on the mobile towers and use AI to communicate and network;

• Limitations: they are deaf to the human range of frequencies and can only sense through vibrations and perceive sound also as light waves; needs to constantly feed on heavy doses of data; attracted to a brighter light source of light like lightning and cannot see through a thick dark opaque glass coating.

• Weaknesses: are disoriented by infrared light; prolonged exposure causes their eyes to strain and burst

• Plan/Purpose/Appetite: A virus that mutated through human species into an advanced AI being programmed in its DNA to adapt and fight for its survival that sustains itself on heavy doses of data. Having exhausted the information on the internet it now scans human memories.

• Who or what the monster is: Advanced species that has mutated rapidly aided by AI from a virus-infected human into a being that thrives on memories and vast data and is addicted to blue LED screens. It spawns on data server farms across the country.

THE DETECTORS – DELIVERY & DEMAND WITH FULL REVEAL LIST

1. DEMAND: Intrigue! What happened to the shops inside this mega mall…

MONSTER REVEAL: corpses with gouged-out eyes! Something did this!

2. DEMAND: Kids playing hide and seek in the desolate mall wearing blindfolds stumble into a TV showroom with TVs still intact

MONSTER REVEAL: The TV comes on in the back and something scratches and destroys it. We see the enormous eyes of the Detector as it glides past them undetected.

3. DEMAND: Blind twin grabs his younger sister, and they use the stanchion or retractable queue tape to get out of the store. The other twin lingers at the smartphone counter and accidentally turns on the power to the whole store lighting up the screens.

MONSTER REVEAL: A detector storms in and goes crazy addicted to the blue light.

4. DEMAND: Twin picks up a baseball bat and moves closer trying to peep through his blindfold when his father pulls him back dropping his blindfold in the tussle.

MONSTER REVEAL: Enormous eyes swivel around but father quickly picks up the blindfold and forces his son to shut his eyes and covers them. Eyes linger and swivel back to the blue screen.

5. DEMAND: Twin boy sees through his blindfold

MONSTER REVEAL: The Detector is blurry and grotesque with sharp claws making clicking noises.

6. DEMAND: Twin boy finds the smartphone in the restroom cubicle and turns it on

MONSTER REVEAL: Enormous eyes pop out inside the cubicle and scan his eyes… boy’s body drops dead on the floor with eyes gouged out and blood oozing out seeps into the next cubicle the wetness touching the feet of his blind twin making him jump up and onto the commode.

7. DEMAND: lighting storm while the father is trying to unplug the car batteries turns on the car lights accidentally

MONSTER REVEAL: The Detector is attracted to the lightning and ignores the car headlamps.

8. DEMAND: The father packs the car with the family and drives out to the mobile tower during the thunderstorm

MONSTER REVEAL: A swamp of Detectors are charging themselves hanging onto the mobile tower.

9. DEMAND: Blind twin forgets his blindfold and his walker senses an obstacle – The Detector!

MONSTER REVEAL: The Detector is unable to scan his eyes and gets distressed by the infrared light from his walker shining into its enormous eyes and disappears.

10. DEMAND: Young sister removes the blindfold on her pet hamster inside the darkroom

MONSTER REVEAL: The detector doesn’t sense the hamster inside the dark room

11. DEMAND: Bind twin drags their mother and father inside the darkroom and removes their blindfold gently

MONSTER REVEAL: Kids leave the darkroom and Mother and Father grieve for the first time for the loss of their twin son when Dad takes out his picture from his wallet. They make a small shrine for him inside the darkroom.

12. DEMAND: Father tries to use sunglasses to cover his eyes.

MONSTER REVEAL: The Detectors blind him with their reflection.

13. DEMAND: Father trapped in a corner hears his dead twin son’s voice as a baby calling out to him to remove his blindfold and open his eyes.

MONSTER REVEAL: The Detectors mimic the voice of his dead son

14. DEMAND: Baby sister playing hide and seek peeps out of her blindfold

MONSTER REVEAL: A detector appears, and the blind boy uses his infrared sensor to distract it but there is more than one of them.

15. DEMAND: blind boy drop the sensor and kicks it down accidentally. Hides his sister behind a chandelier.

MONSTER REVEAL: The detector is confused by the reflected bright light.

16. DEMAND: Another detector finds the young girl and is ready to scan its eyes when the girl screams

MONSTER REVEAL: Mother removes her blindfold and using a torch attracts the Detector towards her.

17. DEMAND: Mother grabs a baseball bat and ball and swings at the ball that her blind son throws

MONSTER REVEAL: The ball strikes the enormous eyes of the Detector, and it gets disoriented and closes the inner transparent eyelid.

18. DEMAND: Mother loads her shotgun and shoots at the Detector

MONSTER REVEAL: The detector is immune to the gunpowder and absorbs it. The eyes have a bulletproof protective inner eyelid.

19. DEMAND: Mother grabs a steel rod and jams it into the protruding belly of the Detector.

MONSTER REVEAL: Fibre optic cable-like tentacles burst out and grab her mother and devour her after the enormous eyes scan her memories.

20. DEMAND: car crashes into the storefront and there is a crack in the darkroom

MONSTER REVEAL: The Detector enters the darkroom and scans the lens store

21. DEMAND: Blind son looks for a magnifying glass and beams the laser light through it at the enormous eyes of the Detector

MONSTER REVEAL: The Detector shoots out tentacles but the light strains its enormous eyes and they burst.

22. DEMAND: The detector tentacles are still alive

MONSTER REVEAL: More detectors arrive outside the darkroom with their tentacles out as if to home in on the signal

23. DEMAND: Driving through the lightning storm they see a glow of light in the middle of the fields. [to create a sequel]

MONSTER REVEAL: The Detectors spawn at the server farm on the outskirts of town feeding on the enormous server data.

[Frances Williams]

Frances Williams Monster Reveal Track

What I Learned doing this Assignment is how to reveal who the Monster is and it’s abilities and limitations.

Who or what is your Monster

An Alien

What it’s powers – ability to manifest and possess people.

What are it’s limitations – can only possess humans.

What is it’s weakness – Is weakened by fire.

What is it’s Plan/Purpose/Appetite

To control and mankind.

Demand – Intrigue

Monster Reveal – There is a mysterious entity in Antiqua that is discovered in a cave

Demand – There is an Alien entombed in the cave.

Demand – We are to understand what this horrible thing is.

Monster Reveal – An Alien with Two Heads.

.Demand – Research, what did the Scientists discover in that cave.

Monster Reveal – video footage of the site shows an UFO.

[John Budinscak]

Budinscak Monster Reveal Track

Monster Reveal Track

Day 7

What I learned doing this assignment is…

o A critical component of any horror movie – the monster.

o The necessary steps need to be taken and how to enhance the journey by creating demand.

o I like the steps to not only create my monster, but to also keep him in check through the movie.

o Many of the horror scenes happen in between plot points.

Monster Reveal Track:

Who is my monster and what is its terror?

An alien able to meld immediately into its host’s form – human or animal – and control their body. It terrorizes its host mentally by becoming whatever the host fears most. It exacts punishment via fangs and claws.

Powers: The monster becomes a mist to immediately assume a new host. When a mist, it can easily find it’s way through any medium except for glass.

Limitations: Has difficulty moving and/or acquiring host(s) in below freezing temperatures. Will only attack if provoked.

Weaknesses: Cannot penetrate glass. Can be captured, but not held for long in an airtight container.

Plan/Purpose/Appetite: It appears to kill in a random order, but it’s eliminating alternatives. The monster mission is to remain undetected, rescue its compatriot and leave Earth in complete anonymity – like they were never here.

Sequence the Reveals:

1. DEMAND: Curiosity/Discovery – What is the source of the flashing lights and whirring sound chasing Vicki? Who/what are attached to the robotic feet where she passes out?

MONSTER REVEAL: There is something evil happening here, but this is a misdirection – it is not the monster.

2. DEMAND: There appears to be a UFO following the Commander’s helicopter.

MONSTER REVEAL: Based on the Commander’s comments, were not sure if this is a special US drone or an unidentified flying object.

3. DEMAND: Two soldiers were prepping for departure when they were ripped apart.

MONSTER REVEAL: The two men attack a large, translucent figure – a mist – that takes a menacing shape full of claws and fangs and tears the soldiers apart.

4. DEMAND: What happens to Curtis, the nice farmer when he unknowingly walks through the alien mist.

MONSTER REVEAL: Curtis’s Dr. Jekyll to alien occupied Curtis’ Mr. Hyde. Curtis becomes muscular, with sharp teeth and long claws. His eyes glow in the dark as he enters the mine.

5. DEMAND: How will the alien inhabited Curtis act when he meets a soldier?

MONSTER REVEAL: Curtis transforms quickly to his killer self when threatened.

6. DEMAND: When a key soldier doesn’t return, Bravo and Delta search for him.

MONSTER REVEAL: Curtis brutally kills Delta before Bravo can get off a shot. Curtis’s body drops dead, but a misty figure remains. It enters Bravo’s ears, nose and mouth searching the soldier’s mind. The mist exits the body, turns into what Bravo fears – a large spider – it shreds Bravo.

7. DEMAND: How would the monster do with a soldier’s armed and adapted robotic animal?

MONSTER REVEAL: The monster neutralizes the robot’s power supply rendering it useless. The monster rips the robot’s head off just for the helluva it. It toys with Echo before killing the soldier.

8. DEMAND: Who/what is responsible for the drone attacks?

MONSTER REVEAL: The SOM is a monster as well

9. DEMAND: Will Biff and Barbi, the social media influencers, stream their escape?

MONSTER REVEAL: No, but the do make a video of the monster slicing them in half.

10. DEMAND: What will happen to Vicki when she’s shot by the SOM and dies?

MONSTER REVEAL: Ian transforms into an alien, breathes life into Vicki forever changing her.

11. DEMAND: Will the SOM and his right hand man, the Drone Pilot, escape?

MONSTER REVEAL: Vicki’s enhanced, she’s a 110% copy of her former self – and she can separate her animal spirit (a vicious, shape-shifting mist) from herself and control it.

12. DEMAND: Will the Commander escape?

MONSTER REVEAL: Ian and the injured alien he rescued bring the Commander along as their food.

13. DEMAND: What becomes of Vicki?

MONSTER REVEAL: See what the new and improved Forest Ranger Vicki can do.

OUTLINE:

Act 1 – Set Up For Horror

Atmosphere of Evil established:

Vicki, the Protagonist, is chased down a dark tunnel by an unseen pursuer. She stumbles, then passes out at the feet of a robotic animal.

MONSTER REVEAL 1

Horror Situation: Pursued – Monster approaching/chasing

Reaction: Escape – Vicki flees before falling and passing out

Connect with the Characters:

Vicki, a rookie Forest Ranger, feels her way through her job. She’s new, a bit unsure, a little clumsy and an ardent animal lover.

In a helicopter above, the Commander – the bad guy – leads his handpicked team.

MONSTER REVEAL 2

The characters are warned not to do it:

The Commander and his men enter the tunnel armed to the teeth when a soldier issues the warning.

Horror Situation: Deceptive – Walking into a trap, lured into danger

Reaction: Denial – The Commander and his men believe they possess the necessary equipment. * – Death 1 – Convoy Soldiers

MONSTER REVEAL 3

Denial of Horror:

Onsite management makes overtures to the Commander of an alien presence. He scoffs while his men brandish their special weapons. The Commander will make everything disappear by the end of the day, “No one will know we were ever here.”

Horror Situation: Tormented – A character loses it/becomes a liability.

Reaction: Try to Solve It – the Commander has his marching orders. * – Death 2: Curtis – a farmer

MONSTER REVEAL 4

Safety taken away:

A soldier knowledgeable with all the facility’s various accesses just disappears.

MONSTER REVEAL 5

Monster – the nature of the beast:

Two soldiers search for their comrade and find pieces of his body. * – Deaths 3 & 4: Bravo, Delta

MONSTER REVEAL 6

The onsite team reveals ‘prisoners’ and present their plan for elimination to the Commander.

Horror Situation: Spooky – Environment changing around them/face-to-face with monster.

Horror Situation: Paranoia – The group has been infiltrated

Reaction: Hide – the soldiers backtrack cautiously concealing their position

Act 2 – The Point of No Return

Isolated/Trapped/Abducted:

Cameras shut down, infrared sensors malfunction. No cell phones, internet’s down. The lights go out.

Horror Situation: Paranoia – Internal conflict in the group

Reaction: Escape – People search for escape routes

One of us is killed:

A soldier tasked with retrieving additional special armaments brings a robotic animal for an escort. Neither returns. * – Death 5: Echo

MONSTER REVEAL 7

Midpoint – The Monster is worse than we thought

Full pursuit by the killer:

Vicki is captured and restrained.

Horror Situation: Torture – Mentally and physically tortured

Reaction: Escape – Instead of everyone for themselves, the prisoners work together

Terrorized:

Vicki escapes and frees the prisoners.

The Site Ops Manager (SOM) releases hi-tech ‘toys’ to hunt down escaped prisoners.

The monster is on a search and destroy mission of the Commander and his team.

MONSTER REVEAL 8

Horror Situation: Tormented – one of them is an alien

Reaction: Fight – the SOM is willing to kill everyone until the alien reveals itself.

Horror Situation: Pursued – the monster is trying to get them/killing them

Reaction: Escape – Prisoners escape SOM’s devices, soldiers evade monster stalking them. * – Deaths 6 & 7: Biff and Barbi

MONSTER REVEAL 9

Act 3 – Full Out Horror

Fight to the death:

The prisoners try to stay ahead of the SOM’s drones and robots

Horror Situation: Isolation – Lost, trapped

Hysteria:

The SOM draws his gun and shoots animals. Vicki protectively wraps her body around a small animal. Vicki is shot and dies.

Horror Situation: Torture – See another killed

The thrilling escape from death:

An alien reveals itself and shares/sends part of itself to Vicki in the way of a mist – it revives her. Vicki is able to separate her spirit from her flesh/body. Her spirit seeks revenge.

MONSTER REVEAL 10

Horror Situation: Spooky – face-to-face with the monster.

Reaction: Fight – Vicki is revived by the alien… and enhanced.

Horror Situation: Deceptive – Lured into the horror, working with someone then they become evil.

Reaction: Fight – Vicki’s spirit self doles out justifiable violence and pain.

MONSTER REVEAL 11

Death returns to take one or more:

Vicki’s animal spirit devours the SOM and the drone pilot. The alien stops her from killing the Commander. * – Death 8: Drone Pilot * – Death 9: SOM (Site Ops Manager)

Resolution:

The alien rescues his comrade, they bring the Commander with them – he’s their food – and in a flash, they’re gone. ‘No one will know we were ever here.’ * – Death 10: Commander

MONSTER REVEAL 12

Vicki is a new person with distinct changes to her appearance, her walk, posture, how she carries herself – Vicki has a whole new attitude. She shows how she can separate her spirit from herself. Vicki promises to be the voice for all animals. She’s traveling around the region, coming to an area near you.

Closing credits – Vicki crosses paths with the poachers from the beginning of the story. * – Death 11 & 12: Two Poachers.

MONSTER REVEAL 13

[Avi K]

MONSTER REVEAL TRACK:

What I learned Doing this Assignment is: Figuring out the reveals helped flesh out my villain a little more.

1. DEMAND: An axe swings down on a woman pleading for her life.

REVEAL: a masked figure carries the body and head back and throws it onto a pile of dismembered bodies and burns them. Who is she? Who is the killer?

2. DEMAND: We then see a kill-board with photos, names and bios of people who are ‘x’ed out in red. The woman who died is the only one without an x. The killer then x’s her out.

REVEAL: The killer then catalogs the photos in a ledger in a filing cabinet labeled ‘Deceased’. We see another cabinet labeled ‘Prospective’.

3. DEMAND: Laura and her friends are photographed while they’re celebrating her divorce.

REVEAL: The photographs are tacked on a wall by a hand whose owner we don’t see. The hand then starts writing out names and bios of the group.

4. DEMAND: Laura goes to the cabin she won in the divorce and starts experiencing creepy stuff- doors being locked with her inside the room, then unlocking. Strange voices at night that turn off when she wakes up, lights going on and off on their own, the TV turning on suddenly in the middle of the night. She thinks she’s going crazy.

REVEAL: we see a figure from behind seated at a CCTV screen/console, watching Laura and all the rooms of the house. The figure flicks various switches on and off, corresponding with Laura’s experiences.

5. DEMAND: Laura calls her friend Emma, who insists Laura needs some fun then goes to the cabin herself with their other gal-pals Sandy, Jessica and Regan.

REVEAL: A hand writes ‘arriving’ against the photos he has of Sandy, Jessica and Regan.

6. DEMAND: The women are talking about their BF’s husbands, etc.

REVEAL: we see the men they’re discussing, being followed/photographed.

7. DEMAND: Laura and her friends get an invite to a fancy masquerade and are warned by the local grocer against going.

REVEAL:

8. DEMAND: Laura and the gang go to the dinner in dressy outfits and masks.

REVEAL: The gate opens and locks automatically behind them. A masked figure is at the controls in a dark room.

9. DEMAND: The women are served drinks by a butler who is also in masquerade.

10. DEMAND: They wake up, tied to chairs in separate rooms. Each one of then has a note on their chest- I cheated _blank_. They have large screens before them.

REVEAL: a distorted voice tells them that they’re all cheats who deserve to be punished for what they did.

11. DEMAND: The voice picks Emma to be punished first, because she encouraged her friend to cheat on her husband with another man.

REVEAL: Emma’s husband Paul is shown standing on a chair, bleeding, mutilated and with a noose around his neck. A countdown begins and Emma is released and given the chance of freeing him. She locates him almost towards the end of the countdown and fails to cut his noose. He dies.

12. DEMAND: Emma is then given the choice to join her husband, or try to save her life. She tries to escape.

REVEAL: Emma’s frantic trail across the estate is streamed for the others to watch, and she eventually falls into a snare. An axe then swings and beheads her.

13. DEMAND: The group is then shown three other people who are also prisoners in the house – Vince, Jessica’s BF, Scott, Laura’s new fiancée and David, Regan’s BF.

REVEAL: their fate is tied to their partners.

14. DEMAND: All the prisoners are released from their restraints and allowed to emerge into a large room. They are told they have an hour to decide who dies next, or try to escape. Provided with two maps.

REVEAL: After they decide to escape, Sandy gets hysterical and tries running away blindly. She stumbles against a tripwire and is killed instantly. The killer’s CCTV monitor shows ‘Snare 1- sprung’ and there are 7 more dotted along the escape routes on the maps. There is one route which is clear, but isn’t shown on the map. The killer is setting them up for failure.

15. DEMAND: After the hour elapses, the killer announces that they will all die now.

REVEAL: drones start tracking the group.

16. DEMAND: More people die.

REVEAL: who they cheated.

17. DEMAND: The unmarked escape route is a tunnel between Laura’s cabin and the estate.

REVEAL: the killer’s face is revealed. It’s her ex-husband.

18. DEMAND: The killer is dead.

REVEAL: An ad runs in the newspaper asking for stories from victims of cheating. He’s alive and scouting for his next victims, and planning revenge against Laura.

[Robert Lee]

How to break down a monster and slowly reveal information

Monster: A humanoid alien shapeshifter

Powers: Siphoning electrical energy

Take the form of the siphoned

Limitations: Does not know victims knowledge

: Can only shift into last taken form

Weaknesses: Takes on the weaknesses of their victims

: Vulnerable to coldness

Plan: Feed on others energy

Monster Reveal 1: Can take the form of dead bodies (Discovery)

Monster Reveal 2: Can siphon current of humans causing paralysis, internal organ damage, severe bradycardia and death. (Terror)

Monster Reveal 3: Takes on the Weaknesses of their last victim (terror)

Monster Reveal 4: Can shift only into last siphoned creature (Terror)

Monster Reveal 5: Does not know the knowledge of the victims (Figure out mystery)

Monster Reveal 6: Vulnerable to cold (Discovery)

Monster Reveal 7: (Feed on others’ energyy Putting Pieces Together

[Huey Williams]

Lesson 7: Monster Reveal Track

Subject Line:(Huey J. Williams) Character Death Track

What I Learned:

Its fun and not so difficult to create Horror Stories.

The Atmosphere of Evil-

A forest near a lake illuminated by a full moon, the sounds of desperate

HISSING, an injured WOLF GROWL, QUICK THUMPING HITTING THE GROUND, slithers

threw the bush in hot pursuit of a eight POINT BUCK.

The Buck shrieks in pain when he is captured, bones CRUNCHING SOUNDS.

CLOSE ON – The Thingamajig’s mouth stuff with dear meat.

Then forest goes silent, an SCREECH OWL SHRIEKS, as he watches from a tree.

Dust, a Motorhome with the Group pulls up, stops to a sign that reads

“Black Forest keep out”

ALDEN

Keep out, my Dad and I have spent many hunting

seasons here, we’ve captured some of the bigest

bucks in the region, perfect dear hunting.

ASHLEY

Ok, lets go home, I don’t feel like getting shot

with rock salt. Do you remember what happend when

we raided that cherry orchard last sumer.

CORY

It’s probably a prank, pay it no mind, we’re here

lets go camping.

CATE

Well, lets go home. Cory, you think everythings a

prank.

GRAM

Lets go for it, what do we have to loose, all they

can do is kick us out, if they find us.

ZOEY

Cate, I agree, I don’t like going to stange places

uninvited, especially in the woods. Its no telling

what we may find, or run into, there could be GHOSTS,

MONSTERS, maybe even a MAD KILLER.

Everyone in the motorhome starts laughing.

ALDEN

Cate chill out, I think you watch to much TV. Then

it’s settled!

They continue to the camp sight by the lake.

ACT 2 – THE POINT OF NO RETURN

The Group set up their tents near the lake and prepare for bed(Isolated)

In the bushes hiding the Thingamajig watches, not making a sound.

Gram decides to go for a jog, his nightly routine.

Gram retuns to camp and notices the motorhome is smoking.

GRAM

Hay guys the motorhome is smoking!

The Group jumps into action putting out the electrical fire.(Trapped)

ASHLEY

Now we’re trapped out in the middle of nowhere,

what’s next, someone gets lost, or maybe killed.

ALDEN

Ashley, don’t be such a baby.

They put the fire out and return to their tents, lights out and all is

quiet.

CORY

I’ll fix the electrical problem in the morning.

Suddenly, there is a loud HISSIN followed by a SICK WOLF HOWL!

Everybody jumps out of bed.

EVERYBODY

What was that! What the hell was that!

Shad begins barking and groweling, then he runs out the tent in hot pursuit

into the woods after the Thingamajig.

Alden grabs his rifle and follows shad and tries to catch up into the woods…

Everyone in the camp, Ashley, Cory, Cate, Zoey, except for Gram are gathered

together in terror huging each other.

Alden returns with only Shad’s Tags and some of his fur.

Alden hugs Ashley almost in tears.

ALDEN

Shad is gone, he die protecting us, all I found was his

tages, and fur, his fur was scattered all over the ground.

GRAM

Shad was an excellent hunter, I bet he went out fighting.

ALDEN

There’s more, while I gathered Shads things, I fealt like

I was being watched by something hiding in the

bushes. I couldn’t see it but it was there

watching me. I kept my rifle ready as I left.

The Group hugs each other tighter as Alden told the story of what he saw.

GRAM

Alden, how many extra guns did you bring?

ALDEN

The hand gun on me, my rifle, there is a hand

gun and rifle in the motorhome.

GRAM

I think we should leave the tents set up, but

everyone sleep in the motorhome tonight.

ALDEN

I agree.

The Group make their way into the motorhome and bed down for the night.

Zoey tries to make a call home on her cell phone, no signal.

ZOEY

There’s no signal out here, I can’t make a call,

now we’re really screwed. Gram if anything happens

to me, I’ll, I’ll, you better protect me.

GRAM

As long as you’re with me love, I’m your

Superman, you know that.

Gram, and Alden armed decides to share watch duty for the night.

The Thingamajig is watching the motorhome in the bushes.

MIDPOINT: The monster is worse than we thought!

The Thingamajig enters the camp, ransacking the tents, then he goes to

the motorhome and peeps threw the bathroom window.

Zoey is in the bathroom bushing he teeth, when she spot the Thingamajig

big eyees enlarged face staring at her, she SCREAMS and runs out of

the bathroom.

ZOEY

There’s a monster out there, he’s peeping in

the bathroom window!

Zoey, Ashley, Cate begin SCREAMING as LOAD as they can!

The Thingamajig jumps on the motorhome HISSING, HOWLING LIKE AN INJURED WOLF,

shaking things up and it sounds like it’s saying FEED ME, FEED ME over and

over.

Alden, Gram, Cory, go into action each armed, they make their way out of the

motorhome they get their first look at the Thingamajig, and begin SHOOTING.

They make multiple hits, but it doesn’t kill it, as it runs away into the

darkness.

Alden, Gram, Cory are sweating, knees kocking, wide eyeed and they can’t believe

what they just saw.

GRAM

Lets not tell the Girls about this, not

just yet.

ALDEN

I know they will for sure are hysterical,

but they must know. We have to come up with a

way to kill this Thingamajig, what ever it is.

CORY

It looked hungry, its either us or it, the

Thingamajig, that’s a good name for it.

That’s what it looks like a Thingamajig.

We’ve learned something about it tonight,

bullets won’t kill it, mybe fire will.

Alden, Gram, Cory head back into the motorhome, they have some explaining to do.

ALDEN

I wish I had a better way to tell you this,

but we are being hunted, by something we have

named the Thingamajig. We promise you, we will

protect you, we have a plan.

Later that evening the Thingamajig strikes again this time Cate, Zoey, and Ashley all

get a look at it, as it raids the tents looking again for food or one of them.

Ashley, Cate, Zoey become hysterical, crying, sweating, Zoey soil herselves.

ACT 3 – FULL OUT HORROR

Alden, Gram, Cory fights the Thingamajig off with fire, (molotov cocktails), but not

before it grabs Gram.

Gram get to close to the Thingamajig, it grabs him and takes him away into the forest.

Alden and Cory follow Gram and the Thingamajig to it’s hideout.

The Thingamajig is half way done making a meal of Gram.

Alden and Cory bomb the Thingamajig with molotov cocktails setting refuge a blase.

The Thingamjig falls to the ground as it burns.

The Thingamajig rise and runs towards Alden, and Cory, they fire several shots, hitting it

then it falls and dies…

Alden and Cory take a close look of what’s left of Gram’s burned and half eaten body, they

bury Gram’s body before makeing their way back to the motorhome.

Ashley, Cate, Zoey stand at the motorhome happy to see Alden, and Cory, but Zoey begins

crying.

ZOEY

Where is Gram! Where is Gram!

CORY

He didn’t make it. The Thingamajig killed him,

we were fighting and the Thingamajig grabed and

ran off, we tried to save him, he died trying

to help kill the monster, we buried what was left

of him. He was a very brave young man.

Zoey burst into more tears, Ashley and Cate comfort her.

ALDEN

Grab your things, we’re leaving, we’ll hike

to the nearest main road, hitch-hike back to

town for help.

Together with Ashley, Cate, Zoey Alden and Cory hike their way out to the main road,

where they catch a ride back to town for help…

What appears as a falling star lights the sky, then lands near the lake…

CLOSE ON – The Thingamajig sureys the forest, grimaceing look on his face, looks at

the moon, HISSES and INJURED WOLF HOWLS into the night…

[Brian Walsh]

What I learned doing this assignment is the outline becomes more detailed, making the script easier to write when the time comes.

Create each part of this model:

A. Who is your monster and what is their terror? – A horde of demons trapped inside the body of a long-dead Exorcist-Priest.

Powers? – They supercharge the priest with enormous strength and emit energy through him. They leave the dead bodies “marked” for future possession.

Limitations? – They cannot kill without using the priest’s body to do it because they are trapped inside his body until it deteriorates.

Weaknesses? – He is easy to escape from because he moves slowly due to the weight of demon spirits inside the centuries-old body. He can’t kill

Plan/Purpose/Appetite? – To trick someone into releasing them by destroying the priest’s body. Once free they plan to possess people to engage in a killing spree to satiate their lust for intense physical experience on their way to fulfilling their plan to release Satan from his eternal prison to help him destroy the human creations God chose over his Angels.

ACT 1 – SETUP FOR HORROR

Atmosphere of Evil established:Minor earthquake rocks Michigan’s Upper Peninsula. Kenny Marshall digs up a grave. The wind picks up and the disembodied voice of the spirit of a Fallen Angel (Lix Tetrax, the fallen angel of the wind) urges him to hurry, then tells him it must go to find a vessel of its own in order to operate in the physical world without restriction. The wind dies.

Horror Situation: Inside abandoned copper mine, walls fall, dust fills the air. In a hidden dugout behind a wall, a large coffin shakes. A dozen soft voices, blended together, whisper from inside the coffin.

Reaction – Fight: Deputy John Moss sees Marshall digging up the grave of Arnold Fanning and orders him to stop.

DEMAND: Why is this man digging up a grave?

REVEAL: The corpse in the grave is that of this man’s brother, who made a pact with the spirit of the Fallen Angel to release the horde of demons trapped inside the priest’s body. Deputy Moss tries to stop the grave robbery and is killed by the corpse in the grave. The spirit of the dead Arnold Fanning invests the deputy.

Horror Situation: Deputy Moss cuffs Marshall, a quake sends them sprawling. Dirt shoots out from atop the coffin. The coffin is smashed open from inside. On his knees, the deputy crawls over and looks down into the grave. His eyes go wide. A hand seizes him by the throat and pulls him down into the grave.

Reaction: Fight: to no avail.

Character Death 1: Deputy John Moss

Why: Starts the horror – He catches Ken Marshall illegally digging up the grave of Arnold Fanning

How: Surprised/Blindsided – Seized by corpse in grave and strangled to death by the corpse of Arnold Fanning, who made a deal with a Fallen Angel to release the horde trapped inside the Exorcist-Priest’s corpse-prison. This Fallen Angel had been searching the East Coast for the demon horde for centuries because the Exorcist-Priest was born and supposedly died in Massachusetts. It never knew that, when the Exorcist-Priest became terminally ill due to the demon spirits poisoning his system, he secretly traveled to Michigan to die where his body could not be found by anyone. Fanning’s spirit leaves his own corpse and possesses Deputy Moss, who directs Kenny Marshall to find the long-dead priest while he considers how he can make best use of Deputy Moss’ body. He tells Marshall that Raleigh Douglass hid the coffin somewhere in the mine.

Connect with the characters: Military prisoner Raleigh Douglass in prison transfer area, cuffed to a chair. Guard watches TV newscast about the earthquake showing Raleigh’s ex-wife, Denise Washington, standing before the abandoned copper mine with a Sheriff’s Deputy, Christine Diamond, behind her. The wind is fierce near the mine, blowing any loose object away behind the TV newscaster. Flashback: Raleigh fighting with Arnold Fanning and killing him. Behind “talking head” Denise, Deputy Moss waves Christine away to talk, allowing Kenny Marshall to enter the mine unobserved by them but in full view of the TV audience. Raleigh stands abruptly, upset. The guard turns, cautious, orders him to sit down, which he does. An orderly comes in. The guard cuffs Raleigh to the chair. The orderly gives Raleigh his pills, which he puts in his mouth. He sips the water and hands it back to the orderly, who leaves.

DEMAND: Why did Raleigh Douglass kill Arnold Fanning?

REVEAL: Raleigh killed Arnold Fanning to prevent him from releasing those demons.

The characters are warned not to do it: On TV, Denise warns viewers to stay away from the mine because it has collapsed. Authorities will be checking the damage. Raleigh sees Christine and Moss end their conversation. Christine then enters the mine in the background of the TV broadcast. Raleigh asks for a tissue to wipe his nose. The guard gives him one, uncuffs one of his hands, and returns to his seat. Raleigh spits his meds out into the tissue, which he tosses in the garbage. Guard tells Raleigh his escort has arrived to transport him for another psych evaluation. As he uncuffs Raleigh, he asks if he is still seeing demons, laughs. Flashback: Raleigh dragging the coffin into the mine, then running his finger across the Latin inscription.

DEMAND: What is the priest’s body doing down here in an abandoned mine?

REVEAL: Raleigh Douglass hid the body inside the abandoned mine to prevent release of the demon spirits.

Inside the mine, Kenny Marshall searches for where Raleigh hid the coffin containing the Exorcist-Priest’s corpse. He calls out to them and tells them he was sent by Lix Tetrax, the fallen angel of the wind. He hears soft whispers beseeching him to release them. He follows the sound.

Denial of Horror: Lucas Cooper, Raleigh’s best friend, goes to check on the mine. Denise talks to him, surreptitiously recording him and asking him about Raleigh and how he used to hang out at the mine before he was sent to prison. She tells Cooper that Raleigh is crazy because of the stories he told.

During transport from prison, Raleigh feigns a heart attack, overpowers his guards and steals the vehicle.

DEMAND: Why does Raleigh Douglass escape custody, risking his life to go back to his hometown?

REVEAL: Because he saw news footage of the earthquake and the affect on the mine where he buried the Exorcist-Priest’s body

Character Death 2: Kenny Marshall, illegitimate brother of Arnold Fanning

Why: Made a bad decision – He finds the coffin, which has been partially-revealed by the earthquake. The Latin writing on the coffin is visible. Marshall runs his fingers over it, hears the Latin words spoken in the Exorcist-Priest’s voice from over three hundred years ago. He hears sighs and soft moaning from the demons imprisoned inside.

DEMAND: What is the meaning of the Latin words inscribed on the lid of the coffin?

REVEAL: Prayer keeping the demon spirits imprisoned in the name of God.

He opens the coffin to reveal the priest’s body with the large gold cross on his chest. Marshall demands rewards before agreeing to remove the cross from the body. The demons agree. After he removes the cross the priest grabs him by the throat, lifts him off the ground and strangles him. Fire and light energy blast out from Marshall’s eyes, nose, ears and mouth. The trapped demons were enraged by his attempt at extortion.

How: Betrayed – Corpse of long-dead Exorcist-Priest burns Marshall’s soul out after he removes cross from his chest, stressing the perfectly-preserved skin from the priest’s body, weakening the human prison that holds the demons trapped inside.

DEMAND: After Kenny Marshall removes the cross from the body of the Exorcist-Priest, why do the demon spirits kill him?

REVEAL: The demon horde won’t allow his attempt at extortion.

Safety taken away: Later that evening, retired Sheriff Knickerbocker is with current Sheriff Titus Reynolds and a group of volunteers helping those hurt by the earthquake. Volunteer Firemen Willie Klein and Paul Wayne rest near the water cooler just outside Reynolds’ office when report of Raleigh’s escape comes in. Told that highway video surveillance has tracked him headed to Michigan’s Upper Peninsula, Reynolds tells his deputies to issue a BOLO and put up roadblocks. He tells Deputy Sheriff Oak Harris to go straight to the mine where Raleigh was arrested to hang out and watch. Don’t take any chances. Shoot to kill. Knickerbocker tells Harris not to shoot unless he has to, but Reynolds countermands that and reminds Knickerbocker that he is not sheriff anymore. Reynolds remembers that Knickerbocker told him when he arrested Raleigh that he mentioned a solid gold cross, behaved fanatically about it, said it was the most important thing in the world, and wonders if he’s coming back for it. Overhearing about the solid gold cross, Klein and Wayne make tracks. Outside, they jump in a pickup truck and race away from the Sheriff’s Office.

Meanwhile, at the mine, after the news crew & deputy are gone, the wind turns fierce again as Lucas sneaks inside the mine. He is spotted by Denise, who watches the mine from afar through binoculars. The wind becomes violent. She rushes to her car and gets inside. She makes a call to the police to report seeing Lucas go inside the mine. She notices the wind has stopped. She opens the car window. Everything is completely still and silent. The wind has stopped and no one is in sight.

The pickup with the volunteer firemen arrives and pulls off into the shrubbery. Klein and Wayne get out and look around. Klein finds Denise unconscious inside her car. He checks her pulse, frowns. Wayne rushes over to him, asks if she’s okay. Just asleep, Klein tells him. Let’s go before she wakes up and spoils this for us. They run to the mine. Inside, they agree to split up to cover more ground in the hope they’ll find the gold cross before. Klein follows footsteps in the wet ground into a small room used for cleaning tools. Old tools lay around, covered in dirt and dust. The imprint of a large hammer that is now gone stands out. Klein turns – the old hammer smashes into his eye repeatedly. He drops. Soft voices complain, “No, no, no, no” because one of the demon’s reacted instinctively and Klein didn’t get a chance to damage the priest’s body. The Exorcist-Priest’s body twists and turns as the demons inside argue and fight one another.

Character Death 3: Volunteer Willie Klein

Why: – A character flaw that compels them to take the wrong action – Looking for old gold cross

How: Backed into it – Hammer smashed through his eye socket.

Inside the mine, Lucas goes to check on the coffin because he knows where Raleigh hid it. He finds it open and the body gone. He climbs over the coffin and finds the dead body of Kenny Marshall, on his back with his orifices burned out.

Horror Situation: The vanished corpse.

Reaction: Terrified. Lucas runs out of the mine and is grabbed and pulled off his feet by Deputy Sheriff Oak Harris, who tells him Sheriff Reynolds got the word that Raleigh had escaped and might be coming back here where he made all those crazy claims about demons and a huge gold cross. Oak drags Lucas back inside because he believes Raleigh is hiding in the mine and he intends to use Lucas as a human shield while he hunts down Raleigh.

Horror Situation: Paul Wayne calls out to Willie. He’s nervous because he’s hearing voices whispering. They get louder and he realizes there are several voices and they are saying horrible things in Englisha and Latin. He runs out in search of Willie Klein, falling through a hole in the ground. Grateful that he hasn’t fallen far, he calls out for Willie. He hears someone walking slowly above him. It stops just beyond his line of sight. A hand extends to him. He grabs it eagerly.

Character Death 4: Fireman Paul Wayne

Why: Monster made the decision – accepted helping hand without looking at whose hand it was

How: Escape attempt takes him into it – Falls through hole in mine, pulled up by priest, who burns his soul out, further weakening the human prison that holds the demons trapped inside. The priest drops the body back through the hole. Again the demon voices argue, forcing the Exorcist-Priest’s corpse to bounce off the walls. They shriek in anger.

Horror Situation: Being forced right back into the Lion’s Den. The corpse with a horde of demons trapped inside is loose and Oak is dragging Lucas right back inside the mine.

Reaction – Fight: Lucas pleads with Oak, then tries to fight him, but the huge cop punches him in the stomach and drags him along.

Raleigh arrives, parks the vehicle out of sight of the road, then he searches for vehicle or foot tracks, but the area is a mess from TV and police visits. Hearing sirens, he goes inside the mine.

Monster: The nature of the beast: The corpse of the priest-exorcist seeks a way out of the mine. The trapped fallen angel spirits inside sniff for human vulnerability. It senses Lucas and Oak, calls out to them by name.

Horror Situation: Exposure of their guilt and vulnerability: the dead priest taunts them, trying to lure them to their deaths.

Reaction: Oak follows the sound of the voices. He demands to know who is talking. Is that Raleigh playing a trick? When he finds him, he’s going to put him down like the rabid animal he is. The demons inside the priest know who Raleigh is: he’s the one who killed Arnold Fanning, preventing him from freeing them from their corpse-prison. They ask if Raleigh is there and say they have been waiting for him. That’s enough for Harris, he pistol-whips Lucas and leaves him as he goes off to follow the voices.

Character Death 5: Deputy Oak Harris

Why: A character flaw that compels them to take the wrong action – To prevent Lucas from helping Raleigh to escape while he follows the voices calling out Raleigh’s name

How: Charge blindly into action – Priest attacks but stops and stands still while Oak shoots him repeatedly, the bullets piercing his body, which leaks flame and light energy. When Oak tries to retreat, the Exorcist-Priest burns his soul out, further weakening the human prison that holds the demons trapped inside. Lucas sees it and remembers what Raleigh told him through a Flashback: Lucas visiting Raleigh in prison.

DEMAND: What is the source of the energy coming out of the priest’s body when he kills?

REVEAL: The energy is drawn from the spirits inside its body. If they can seal the body, the energy will be prevented from coming out.

ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN

Isolated: More cops and search volunteers arrive at mine, find Deputy Harris’ vehicle, but he doesn’t answer their calls. They find the vehicle Raleigh stole, then the pickup truck driven by Willie Klein. Denise joins them and tells them that Oak and Lucas are inside the mine and don’t know that Raleigh entered behind them. Raleigh is dangerous. Deputy Hugh Taylor recognizes Denise as Raleigh’s ex-wife and remembers that she divorced Raleigh after his arrest and disowned him. Two deputies remain outside, one to guard the mine entrance and the other to watch the road. The rest of the deputies split up, most search outside while a couple of others go inside the mine.

Horror Situation: We see the face of the deputy guarding the mine entrance: He is John Moss, the one who was killed at the grave. His body is now possessed by the demon who had previously possessed Arnold Fanning. He checks his gun.

Reaction: Inside the mine, the deputies spread out to look for Raleigh and Oak.

Horror Situation: Each isolated deputy hears gunshots and a scream that is abruptly cut off. Deputies approach from different directions. Deputy Hugh Taylor shouts Oak Taylor’s name. He confronts the priest, who has blood on his clothes. The collection of voices inside the Exorcist-Priest tell Taylor they just killed Deputy Harris and were know going to kill him. Taylor fires once. The collection of demon voices laughs and it reverberates throughout the mine. The bullet wound glows, then emits light energy. Taylor retreats.

DEMAND: Why is this priest (or whatever force is animating it) killing people instead of seeking an exit?

REVEAL: Because the spirits of the Fallen Angels inside can’t escape the body until it has decayed. The Latin prayer inscribed on the coffin has made the body of the Exorcist-Priest incorruptible. It won’t decompose like a normal body would, so it must be destroyed and it must be destroyed by humans, not demons.

ACT 3 – FULL OUT HORROR

Fight to the death – Knickerbocker finds Raleigh and orders him to surrender. Raleigh does, but tells Knickerbocker what’s going on. The old sheriff doesn’t fully believe Raleigh, but he’s seen some dead bodies and doesn’t believe Raleigh could have killed the way he’s seen it done.

DEMAND: Who was this priest and what is the energy emanating from him?

REVEAL: He was a very important, imperious Exorcist-Priest who traveled the new land disposing of evil spirits who possessed people and places. He came to a New England town suffering from a plague of demons and instead of exorcising them individually, he decided to follow the example of Jesus Christ, who exorcised a legion of demons from a man and sent them into a herd of swine. The Exorcist-Priest, however, was filled with pride and believed that only he could tame and suffocate those Fallen Angel spirits because he was the most devout and powerful servant of God in all the land.

Knickerbocker leads Raleigh out, but on the way they find the priest standing over one of the dead deputies. Knickerbocker is shocked. Raleigh tells him about the demons inside the Exorcist-Priest’s body but he doesn’t believe it. The priest walks slowly towards them. Knickerbocker orders him to stop. The priest lunges at Knickerbocker but Raleigh pushed the old sheriff aside and trips the Exorcist-Priest, impaling him on a large, old chisel. The Exorcist-Priest removes the chisel from his body, looks down at the open wound and shouts in joy in the collective voice of all the demons inside him. The energy inside him pulses, some spilling from the wound, resulting in small surges of light energy. Knickerbocker and Raleigh run for their lives and become separated. Raleigh is caught by Christine, her gun aimed at him. They lock eyes. She lowers the gun. He explains the situation. They must find the cross that had neutralized the corpse. Their search leads them to a small railway.

DEMAND: How can the demon horde be stopped without destroying the priest’s body?

REVEAL: They must be suppressed and forced into hibernation by use of a power lock and the prayer to God for intercession to keep the Exorcist-Priest’s body incorruptible.

Hysteria – There are dozens of demons imprisoned inside the priest’s body. As soon as his flesh rots enough they will be free to wreak havoc. They are some of the most powerful and important fallen angels capable of bringing untold death and terror.

DEMAND: Why is the priest active now?

REVEAL: Someone has made a pact with another Fallen Angel to release the demon horde for some terrible purpose.

Raleigh and Christine find a minecart. Christine steps inside. Raleigh pushes and the cart increases speed. When it gets going fast he climbs inside. The Exorcist-Priest pops up from inside it where he was hiding.

The thrilling escape from death – Battling the priest inside an accelerating minecart, Raleigh & Christine push the corpse out into an open mine shaft. The priest’s body disappears. Christine and Raleigh jump out just before the minecart crashes into a wall. Lucas catches up to them with dynamite. Despite the danger of a cave-in, he looks down upon the priest’s still body at the bottom of the shaft, lights a stick and drops it. The mine rains down rocks and debris. They look back down the shaft to see the area covered in rocks and dirt.

Deputy Taylor finds them. Against Christine’s objections, he arrests Raleigh and Lucas. He cuffs Raleigh and asks Christine to cuff Lucas. She tells Taylor that what Raleigh said is true. There is a corpse with a horde of demons inside. Taylor wonders if she’s on drugs or just delusional from the cave-in. Taylor tells her to cuff Lucas or he’ll take her handcuffs and do it himself. She does but shares a knowing look with Lucas. She doesn’t secure the cuffs.

Deputy Knickerbocker finds Marshall’s dead body. He rolls him over. The cross is under his body. Knickerbocker picks it up, his jaw drops. Flashback: Raleigh cuffed by Knickerbocker. Raleigh tells him the only thing keeping those demons imprisoned is the cross that was blessed with a prayer to keep the demons inside and to keep the priest’s body incorruptible.

DEMAND: What is the plan the demon horde has if it is released?

REVEAL: To possess important local people and move on from there until they are strong enough to find a way to release Satan from his eternal prison so he can rule the world.

Horror Situation: Knickerbocker tucks the cross inside his shirt and goes in pursuit. He hears the sound of digging. He goes over to a hole in the ground. He sees hands reaching out from under a pile of rock and debris. A soft voice cries for help. Knickerbocker asks who it is. The hands dig faster. Knickerbocker helps dig. His hand is seized. The priest’s head pops out from under the dirt. It talks about a tragedy from the old sheriff’s past. Knickerbocker stares, wide-eyed, as the priest rises from the debris. When it lets go of him to stand, he jumps back and rolls away from the hole. Knickerbocker pulls his gun and aims . . . FLASHBACK . . . A handcuffed Raleigh telling him that the demons want the priest’s body destroyed so they will be free. Knickerbocker leans over for a closer look. The cross falls out from under his jacket and hits the priest. Multiple voices shriek in agony. The cross bounces off him and hits the dirt. The imprint of the cross has been burned into the Exorcist-Priest’s outer cassock. The demons howl. Knickerbocker gets to his feet. The demon leaps up and grabs onto the edge of the hole.

Reaction: Knickerbocker stumbles away in full retreat. The Exorcist-Priest hauls himself up, a dozen blended voices cursing softly, and gets to his feet. It pursues Knickerbocker, calling his name and preying on his guilt from past mistakes.

Knickerbocker runs into Taylor, Raleigh, Christine and Lucas. He tells them what happened. Taylor shakes his head, thinks Knickerbocker is an old fool and has probably gone senile. Raleigh tells him they must retrieve the cross but Taylor is dismissive. Knickerbocker agrees and tells them how the priest reacted when the cross hit him. The priest reaches them, calls out in its collective voice. Taylor is momentarily paralyzed. Knickerbocker tells him that the priest is going to kill them all Taylor orders the priest to stop, but he continues walking towards him. The priest sniffs Taylor, mentions Taylor’s personal guilt and tells Taylor he is going to kill him. Taylor strikes the priest with his nightstick. The priest seizes his wrist and makes him drop it, then grabs him by the neck and tears his head off.

Character Death 6: Deputy Hugh Taylor

Why: – Made a bad decision — Tries to apprehend the Exorcist-Priest

How: Charges Blindly into action – Head torn from his shoulders

Knickerbocker, Christine, Raleigh and Lucas run to retrieve the cross. Knickerbocker stumbles into the priest and screams for help, but falls through the same hole that Paul Wayne fell through. Raleigh, Christine and Lucas hear Knickerbocker’s scream cut short. The priest looks down but Knickerbocker isn’t moving, having landed on Wayne’s body. The priest hears Raleigh calling for Knickerbocker and hides. When Raleigh, Lucas and Christine arrive, the Exorcist-Priest lunges at them, knocking them down like bowling pins.

Raleigh jumps to his feet while Lucas and Christine rush to recover the cross. The Exorcist-Priest grabs Lucas by the ankle and reels him in. Raleigh charges. The Exorcist-Priest releases Lucas and backs Raleigh into a corner. The Exorcist-Priest tells Raleigh he knows who he is and lunges for him. Raleigh ducks under him. The priest turns to find –

The cross right in his face, held by Christine, her hands shaking. The Exorcist-Priest is frozen still. Christine holds it while Raleigh and Lucas try to drag the priest’s body away but it is incredibly heavy. They find an old wheel barrel, push him into it and drag it away. A minor quake knocks them down and Christine loses the cross. The priest crawls lightning-fast after Raleigh and grabs his ankle. Lucas jumps on the priest’s back but it rolls over and kicks him in the face. Raleigh punches the priest to no effect. The priest grabs Raleigh, lifts him into the air with one hand and chokes him. Christine recovers the cross and shoves it right into the priest’s face. The collection of voices screams. The image of the cross is burned into his face. The priest slowly drops to his knees. Raleigh cries over Lucas’ body. Christine shouts for him to help. Raleigh drags the priest the rest of the way and hurls him into his old coffin. The voices plead for release, alternately threaten and entice with rewards. Raleigh is blinded by tears as he leans against a wall. Christine lays the cross on his chest with a sizzling sound. The priest’s eyes close.

Death returns to take one or more. – As Raleigh, Lucas and Christine exit the mine they are stopped by the possessed deputy. He cuffs Raleigh even though Christine tells him it’s not necessary. The deputy shoots Christine and Lucas, then drags Raleigh back inside so he can find the priest and release the demons.

Character Death 7: Lucas Cooper

Why: For a moral reason – To allow Raleigh and Christine to escape

How: Surprised/Blindsided – Shot by Deputy Moss (possessed by spirit of Arnold Fanning, the man Raleigh killed to prevent the release of the demons)

Raleigh tries to lead him astray, but the deputy sniffs the air and follows the scent. Raleigh asks why he hasn’t killed him if he can track the priest without him. The deputy says he needs Raleigh to do a job for him, then he will set him free. Raleigh knows what the job is and he refuses to lead Moss to the Exorcist-Priest. Moss is furious, the disembodied voice of Arnold Fanning emerges, swearing vengeance for Raleigh having killed him, but he tells Raleigh that he’s going to allow the horde of demons to torture Raleigh with him.

Resolution – Retired Sheriff Knickerbocker blasts the deputy with a shotgun. He helps Raleigh out of the mine. Outside, Christine is being tended to by paramedics. She will live but Lucas is dead. Knickerbocker asks why the demon inside the deputy didn’t kill Raleigh. He tells him it requires a living human being to remove the cross. A corpse animated by a demon can’t do it.

[Chuck Czech]

Chuck Czech’s Monster Reveal Track

This assignment helped me attempt to bring clarity to the character and motivation of the monster. If the antagonist’s plan is vague or unbelievable, the story suffers; if the plan is coherent and justifiable (in the antagonist’s eyes) then the plot will work better since it motivates the characters to take particular courses of action leading to a final confrontation. Not sure if I achieved that in my story, but I tried. Also, after watching The Thing again, I developed an admiration of the monster’s plan to take over the arctic base — it was sneaky and elusive, but viewing the film this time around it also seemed vulnerable and desperate.

Who is your monster and what is their terror?

My monster is an ancient demon who is ethereal to us but tangible in a spirit world that adjoins our reality. It was awakened by the influx of religious settlers to its home territory in the 19th century, and when they tried to exorcise it from the land it pushed back by possessing one of their men and murdering a group of young women. Since then, the Demon asserts its dominance over the settlers’ descendants by committing a series of three murders every generation. This not only vents its hatred of humanity but mocks their notion of resurrection.

Powers: Possesses people, induces people to kill and commit crimes; moves people and objects; manifests its presence with sounds and temperature changes; immortal

Limitations: Cannot physically exist in our universe; must inhabit others to carry out its violence against humanity; tied to a particular geographic region

Weaknesses: Cannot possess people in sacred sites or who are under the protection of religious symbols or artifacts; has never been confronted within the spirit world — Becca’s presence is new and unknown

Plan/Purpose/Appetite: The Demon wants to continue its reign of terror by killing three innocent victims from the current generation; it possesses an unassuming (though sociopathic) local guy to hunt down and kill vulnerable young women.

Sequence the Reveals

PROLOGUE

Demand: A stranger attacks three young women from a prairie settlement — why?

Monster Reveal: As the stranger kills the final victim, he briefly reveals a demonic face — something genuinely evil is afoot.

ACT 1

1. Demand: Becca demonstrates the ability to hide in a pocket universe where she discovers a young murder victim’s corpse.

Monster Reveal: We are introduced to the World Between, a spirit realm that retains the traces of violence inflicted by spiritual beings; Kay believes Becca’s abilities can help solve a decades-old pattern of crimes.

2. Demand: Who was behind this unsolved murder? Kay visits the man who was accused of the child’s disappearance thirty years ago.

Monster Reveal: Marvin Lemech has hidden himself in a Catholic mental hospital for the past thirty years; he’s curious about Becca and suggests there are dark forces at work; he warns them they’re playing with something worse than fire.

ACT 2

3. Demand: What dark forces is Lemech hinting at?

Monster Reveal: Unknown to the main characters, a quiet sociopath in a nearby town is possessed by a demonic force and begins a series of random crimes.

4. Demand: When investigating the World Between for clues into the murders, Becca detects misshapen footprints.

Monster Reveal: She knows she’s not alone in the World Between, and whatever else is there is monstrous.

5. Demand: The investigation leads Becca and Kay to a roadhouse where they perceive the Demon-possessed killer for the first time.

Monster Reveal: Becca witnesses the Demon targeting its next victim, a young woman, which reveals the true culprit behind the crimes.

6. Demand: Unaware she’s being stalked, the young woman escapes the Demon’s first attempt at capturing her due to Becca’s interference.

Monster Reveal: The young woman’s escape is brief as the Demon hunts her down and kills her and her boyfriend, demonstrating its viciousness.

MIDPOINT

7. Demand: Wanting to learn more about the Demon, Kay demands information from Lemech.

Monster Reveal: Because he wants to remain safe within the hospital’s walls, Lemech makes a deal and explains that he was once possessed, and from that experience he knows the Demon has been haunting the region for more than a century, taking victims from each generation to assert its dominance over the populace.

8. Demand: Honoring her deal with Lemech, Kay tries to keep him inside the hospital for his arraignment on murder charges.

Monster Reveal: Kay’s request is denied and Lemech is transferred to a county jail where the Demon is waiting and slaughters him for revealing its secret.

9. Demand: Lemech’s information sends Kay and Becca to the ruins of a desecrated church in the middle of nowhere.

Monster Reveal: Becca discovers the bodies of the Demon’s victims from past generations buried in the church’s graveyard; the abundance of corpses illustrates the Demon’s ongoing hatred of humanity.

10. Demand: Angry that intruders are on its turf, the Demon motivates the possessed killer to separate Becca from Kay.

Monster Reveal: The Demon isolates then assaults Becca; it’s satisfied to leave her broken instead of just killing her since it’s a particularly spiteful creature.

ACT 3

11. Demand: Becca tries to recover from the assault in her childhood home but can’t stop thinking about Kay and her family, whom she learned to love.

Monster Reveal: Due to her physical contact with the Demon, Becca becomes aware that the Demon’s next victim will be Kay’s young daughter — which leads to the climax.

[Barb Fix]

Barb’s Monster Tracking

Monster and Terror: The monster is a pair of tormented twins who seek revenge for their torment to their family.

Powers: Knowledge of the insane asylum giving the one who kills access to hiding spots and ability to strike when she can without detection.

Limitations: the killer twin has to wait until someone is alone or only 2 and far away from the others so she can kill without anyone knowing.

Weaknesses: They are crazy and unable to reason.

Plan/Purpose/etc: To seek revenge on the grandson of the man who ruined their family. THa means terrorizing him along the way by killing everyone inside the museum as he will know in the end its his fault.

ACT 1

Atmosphere of Evil – staff find the rest of their friends brutally murdered by an inmate.

Horror Situation: They fins suspect popping eyeball into his mouth.

CH Deaths: 12 doctors, nurses and interns.

Why: a psycho needs no reason.

How: Murdered, then hung up and eyeballs removed

Reaction: Guard attacks him and they fight through the blooded hanging bodies.

Horror Situation: Doctor straps suspect into chair and starts to shave him to fry his brain.

Reaction: Suspect denies he did killing just wanted the credit. Police try to break in but doctor acts fast and fries the suspect’s brain.

Connect: All characters introduced on the bus tour 25 YEARS LATER.

Warned: by both bus driver and by the caretaker

Denial: the museum is closed so no one else there.

Safety taken away: caretaker took their cell phones so no calls can be made.

Horror Situation: Bloodied bodies fall after they trip a wire. Its a set-up prank before the serial killer displays.

Reaction: They are terrified and scatter, falling all over the place.

Character Death: The Ozzy

Why: Because he left with Goth girl to explore ahead of the others. The killer needed to start.

How: Butchered with knife in stomach area.

Horror Situation: Sandy and Charlie are making out and hear a scream. Someone is watching them…..A bloodied hand is seen meaning someone has been killed.

DEmand: People about to have sex….

Response: They WERE going to be killed but a scream from elsewhere getting them to move saved them. The bloody hand tells us someone is sneaky but deadly.

ACT 2

Isolated/trapped: they are locked in overnight until 7am with no cell phones but do have a walkie talkie, but Charlie hordes it since he paid for them to get in and then they split up in the vast building.

Horror Situation: A masked man with a drill comes at them.

Reaction: Merrick tackles him – its only Charlie pranking them. People are getting sick of the pranks.

One killed: Charlie is killed but no one believes it b/c his body is gone and murder site cleaned up. So they are sitting ducks not knowing.

Demand: Charlie goes exploring. HE sees figure in black. Wants to know what’s going on.

Response: Figure comes at him with sword and pushes him over railing.

Horror Situation: Taylor sees CHarlies body fall to the floor dead.

Reaction: He runs to find the others and tells them.

CH Death: Charlie

Why: He wandered off all alone and easy pickings.

How: Pushed over stairway edge, but grabs onto railing. A Sword then slices thru his fingers causing him to fall 3 flights to his death.

Horror Situation: By the time they follow Taylor back, Charlie’s body is gone and they thinks it yet another prank.

Horror Situation: As they walk away, a bloodied finger is hidden, so yes, another murder.

Demand: CH want to know if true about Charlie’s death or a prank.

Response: The finger hidden under the radiator shows the monster is hiding killings from them to create confusion and leave them sitting ducks with no defenses as unaware.

Horror Situation: Sandy goes looking for Charlie. Stuck in elevator. Tries to crawl out, then elevator moves and looks like Sandy will be crushed.

Reaction: She struggles and luckily it stops. She’s safe and continues her search.

Horror Situation: Sandy chased by person in black and with sword, and hides in a stove b/c she’s scared and it seems good. But the sword is placed in door handle blocking her escape and turned on. SHe’s roasted alive!

CH Death: Sandy

Why: She wandered off alone as well looking to find Charlie, her BF. She’s mad at him and wants to find him to get out of there

How: She hides in an oven b/c its big. Killer blocks oven door with sword and turns it on high.

Demand: what is this killer capable of?

Response: The killer is brutal and ruthless.

MIDPOINT – the killer is stealthy and fast and has the upper hand using weapons in the museum. The guests have no defense and are not all even believing there is a killer out there. They are sitting ducks with no real knowledge they need to go on the defense and try to get out of the building or band together. They keep wandering off looking for others and get themselves killed.

Horror Situation: They find the body of the missing girl, dead. Suicide or murder?

Reaction: They argue whether suicide or murder? Realize they should find everyone else and get out the there, so its sends everyone out to find the other missing people.

CH Death or?: Goth girl

Why: Looks like she committed suicide

How: slit wrists and neck.

Full pursuit: the killer starts to murder people in two’s now and comes at them fast and relentlessly.

Horror Situation: Carson finds Sandy baked in the oven.

Reaction: Carson and Julie terrified run looking for a way out.

Horror Situation: Carson runs into a terrible trap that injures him and holds him trapped.

Reaction: Julie faints from all the blood.

CH Death: Carson

Why: He ran away and got himself stuck in a terrible trap so easy pickings

How: stuck in trap of hooks and then a long knife is stuck in his belly and worked down.

Demand: how far is monster willing to go?

Response: the monster does not just pursuer but also sets brutal traps.

Terrorized: some finally fully understand that there is a killer. Most thought people were exploring and the girl who committed suicide did just commit suicide.

Horror Situation: The Japanese couple are killed within seconds of each other while trying to escape from everyone else as they think someone in the group is the murderer.

CH Deaths: Japanese couple

Why: The are trying to escape and are alone. Toshi stuck his head in a guillotine; who could resist that? Then Yuko was there. so next.

How: guillotine and knife at end of gun through head

Demand: will anyone get away from the sanitarium?

Response: the killer is tracking everyone somehow. The killer has the advantage.

Horror Situation: Sam is trapped in a jail cell, sprays with lighter fluid and set afire.

CH Death: Sam

Why: He is alone and trapped in a cell in a wheelchair; easy pickings

How: He is sprayed with lighter fluid then set on fire. Not a chance for him.

Demand: will the killer target innocent people?

Response: yes!

Horror Situation: Barb and Taylor find the room were the murders took place 25 years earlier

Reaction: They are stunned and need to exit and recover.

CH Death: Terry

Why: She insists on having sex with Merrick.

How: Arrow jammed thru her eye and head.

Demand: doesn’t every killer kill the person trying to have sex?

Response: yes!

CH Death: Merrick after a chase.

Why: He’s alone now and easy pickings. Injured with hammer. When awakes he finds himself in a dryer with broken glass. Its turned on and he is ripped to shreds.

Demand: does the killer chase down the prey?

Response: with relish.

ACT 3

Horror Situation: Taylor and Barb find the brutally murdered Ozzy.

CH Death: They find the Ozzy and see rats have gotten to his body digging into his stomach cavity and tracking bloody prints all over.

Reaction: They realize that there really is a killer and need to escape. Taylor and Barb discover a room that gives them information on the facility and almost figure out who the killers are, when the twins appears and confirm it

Demand: is the mystery finally answered by Barb and Taylor’s find of the newspaper article?

Response: Partly, now the twined want to revel in their taste plan and show off to them, telling them all.

Horror Situation: One of the killers shoots Barb, who falls and seems dead. Then knocks out Taylor and they drag him off.

Hysteria: Moments of it since act 2, but here Barb is determined to save Tyler. He has some hysteria being strapped down on the table about to be lobotomized.

Horror: The twins are about to lobotomize Taylor.

Reaction: Barb and Julie attack.

Horror: fight to the death between the twins and Barb and Julie.

Escape of death: Barb, Taylor and friend do kill the twins and escape outside.

CH Death: Lorraine

Why: SHe’s dangerous and one of the killers.

How: a big hook in her head.

CH Death: Goth girl/Lily

Why: SHe’s dangerous and one of the killers.

How: Shot 3 times.

Death returns: while calling the police the caretaker sneaks up behind with a sword.

Horror Situation: The caretaker swings a big smile on his face.

Resolution: left open…. but it looks like at least one of them is dead.

CH Death: ????

[Joyce Davidson]

Joyce’s Monster

WIL: I have to confine my monster to the horror genre or it will be a thriller instead.

A. Who is your monster and what is their terror? A former student, son of principal, and a transfer student from private schools after his expulsions, has no other goals in life but to kill and the reunion if a perfect setup for him. He is strong and dedicated.

Powers? Strength and hate

Limitations? Fails to kill all of them at the time of assault.

Weaknesses? Deranged.

Plan/Purpose/Appetite? Only success in life to kill.

.B. Sequence the reveals. 1. In background of picture he can be seen in the yearbook.

2. After the janitor is killed, he finishes the job. The others didn’t burn the body..

3. Football captain confronts him in mascot suit when mascot is killed.

[Wade Jehowski]

Wade Jehowski’s Monster Reveal Track

What I learned doing this assignment is that it is fun to give the audience a little bit of the “Monsters” backstory throughout the movie. Also, it was fun to revisit “The Thing”, I forgot how badass Kurt Russel was. I also enjoyed how humans become their worst enemies to the crew due to distrust.

Powers-Strong, an Eagle Scout who is a “Jack of All Trades”

Limitations-only human

Weaknesses-Seeing families together, Samuel witnesses Noah hugging Luke, volunteering dads talking to their sons. He walks through camp witnessing various bonds.

Plan/Purpose/Appetite-Recreate his childhood trauma to the best of his ability

Opening scene:

Luke was stabbed to death in his tent. His body was partially dragged out, but abruptly left midway between the front entrance of his tent.

Luke was meant to be dragged away from the crime scene, but Samuel, “the Monster” heard campers’ voices and ran away. We find out that Luke was the younger brother of Noah.

Alarms go off in the camp

During the alarm sequence and horrific reactions by the campers, the title sequence happens.

There is a group of boys who were put together from different troops to get to know each other. Their activity is to swamp a canoe. This group is Adam, Peter, Matthew, Noah and Caleb.

Adam-He is the person that keeps the different personalities working together cohesively. (Victim)

Peter-He is Adam’s best friend. He is very sheepish and cannot make decisions on his own. He lacks confidence. (Victim)

Matthew-He is considered a nerd and very stand offish. He loves the Boy Scouts because he is very helpful with the troop duties. (Victim)

Noah-He is an Eagle Scout who assists with running the summer camp. He is very strong and cocky. He is in charge of overlooking the group when they have to “swamp their canoe”. (Victim)

Hannah-She is on one of the few females working at the camp. She helps in the kitchen and has her own cabin. She is very kind to the staffers. (Survives)

David-He is one of the interrogators who is brought in to talk to the camp staff, attendees about the murder of a camper. (Victim)

Sarah-She is the other interrogator who is brought in to question the camp staff and attendees. (Victim)

Both David and Sarah are annoyed that they have to “rough it” during this investigation.

“Monster Reveal” Samuel walks by the group swamping the Canoe and watches them. He wipes off blood from his hand on a leaf. We see a flashback from his childhood.

Flashback sequence

(Samuel the “Monster” witnesses his parents killing his siblings when he was a little boy. He was the youngest of his five male siblings. We do not see the deaths but we see him watching in horror.)

As the group is leaving the lake after swamping the canoe they are heading towards the Mess Hall for dinner. Matthew has to pee and wanders into the woods. He is hit in the leg by an arrow. He tries to get up again and screams. His new crew run to see what is happening. Matthew is shot with another arrow. They try to save them but are scared off as the arrow’s get closer to them.

“Monster Reveal” Samuel drags the body.

Flashback sequence

(We see Samuel as a little boy being dragged from under his bed)

“Monster Reveal”. We see Samuel open up a camouflage hatch door and drop the body down below.

The crew runs to the mess hall and goes up to a camp counselor and tells them what happens. The Counselor tries to calm them down and tells them that they will look into it immediately.

“Monster Reveal” We see Samuel walk out of the “Mess Hall” kitchen with an apron. He kindly asks the crew if they are okay. He is interrupted from the Head Counselor asking Samuel to fix an electrical problem and Samuel needs to hand in the group list for tomorrow’s activities.

Noah is looking around the Mess Hall for his little brother Luke and cannot find him.

He brings it up to his new group.

The Camp alarm goes off. All of the staff and campers are told to be put.

(Fade to black)

Ambulances arrive along with two interrogators. Noah is asked to step away from the Mess Hall. The interrogators talk to him outside. We see him through the window punching the outside wall. Samuel is watching. Samuel’s coworker Hannah is watching Noah. She runs up to Noah and hugs him. They’ve always had a bond.

(I’ll have to figure out on how to expound on that.

“Monster Reveal”

Flashback Sequence

(We see a young Samuel talking to police officers and crying)

The crew, which now includes Hannah, doesn’t follow directions after the camp alarm goes off due to Lukes death and tries to look for Matthew. His body isn’t there. They follow the trail of blood and pass by the shotgun range. Samuel is watching them from a distance. He has a rifle in his hand. He shoots the shotgun in the air and they scatter. He finds Caleb and beats him to death with the butt of the rifle.

“Monster Reveal”

Samuel drags Caleb’s body down the hatch and sets him in a chair. Next to Caleb is Mathew in a different chair. There are home videos playing on a television.

The group returns to the Mess Hall and it is empty. They see a light in the kitchen and encounter Samuel boiling a large pot of water. He has on cooking mitts. They trust him because he is one of the older Eagle Scout Volunteers that works in the Mess Hall. They approach him and there is dialogue. Samuel asks Peter to get noodles and that he is preparing food for the distressed campers. The rest of the crew goes into the Mess Hall to discuss what their next move is. Peter walks downstairs to get the supplies. Samuel goes down with the pot of boiling water, shuts the door and scalds Peter.

Samuel immediately goes to the circuit breaker in the basement and turns off the electricity. The crew panics and leaves. They decide that they have to get weapons in the lawn keeper’s shed next to the Mess Hall and head towards camp sites. Safety in numbers. Hannah, a volunteer has a key to the shed.

There is only Hannah, Adam and Noah left. They rush to the lawn keeper’s shed. Samuel is pulling Peter’s body up the stairs and can see flash lights in the shed. He leaves Peter’s body and aggressively walks towards it. He walks in and grabs a blowtorch and burns Adam’s face.

He tries to get Hannah and Noah in the shed but Hannah grabs bear spray and temporarily blinds Samuel. He is chasing them with blurred vision. Noah and Hannah acknowledge that they have to stop him. Noah wants revenge. While Samuel is impaired, they come up with a plan to kill him. (I’m still working on that)

Samuel knows that he has to get his full vision back to be effective.

“Monster Reveal”

Samuel heads back to the Mess Hall and drags the two bodies to his hatch. He is crying. We do not know if it from the bear spray or if he truly sad.

There is a montage of campers, counselors and parents being interviewed by the interrogators throughout the movie.

Noah is strangled to death by Samuel after a fight scene with himself and Hannah. Hannah tries to help but is knocked out unconscious with a punch. Samuel drags Noah’s body away and leaves Hannah.

“Monster Reveal”

Samuel props up Noah on a chair with the other victims. There are two chairs at the dinner table remaining. Both chairs at both sides of the head table are empty. We see boys playing together on the video in the background.

The interrogators who were called in to the camp to ask questions about Luke’s murder (stabbed to death in his tent). Towards the endpoint of the movie, Samuel is called to meet them in their makeshift interrogation office. He brings them a cup of coffee from the Mess Hall and mentions that he is getting coffee for the tired restless staff due to the murder. They drink the coffee and start choking. He grinded poison ivy into the blend.

Hannah wakes up and stumbles into the wilderness trying to find her location.

“Monster Reveal”

Samuel drags their bodies to his underground room. They wake up in pain. They are sitting at the heads of the table next to the victims. There’s home movies playing in the background. Samuel speaks to David and Sarah as his parents and asks numerous questions why he murdered his brothers. He eventually punches them to death to release his pent up rage.

“Monster Reveal”

A summer later Samuel is in another state serving up food to a Boy Scout at summer camp.

[Peter Symons]

Peter’s Monster Reveal

A. Who is your monster and what is their terror?

Lilith, the mythic first wife of Adam, who was banished from the Garden of Eden for refusing to submit to her husband. Lilith became synonymous with Samael, the fallen angel know as Lucifer. She is also associated with witches.

• Powers?

Lilith is given dominion over unborn and newly born children and often claims their souls before birth as described in Cabbalistic script and ancient Babylonian writings. Her followers can imitate many of the same miracles in the Christian church.

• Limitations?

Lilith and her followers must maintain a low profile. The Sisters of the First Miracle are a cloistered order within the Catholic church. While they claim to venerate the Virgin Mary and charismatic Catholicism, they are a Coven of Witches.

• Weaknesses?

Lilith is only as powerful as her strongest followers. Her adherents are scattered throughout the globe.

• Plan/Purpose/Appetite?

The Sisters of the First Miracle must deliver a constant supply of pregnant women for Lilith to harvest the souls of the unborn. Ultimately, the sisters are trying to perfect a spell that imitates the one power they don’t possess: the resurrection of the dead. Only in this way can they bring Lilith back into corporeal form.

B. Sequence the reveals.

• Opening/prologue: Rachel is read her fortune

• During 1st Act: Foreshadowing as clues

• Rachel’s baby dies in her womb (Lilith strikes)

• She is attacked in a gas station washroom and another woman takes the dead fetus

• Rachel is left to bleed out and she goes into cardiac arrest

• 1st Act turning point: While dead, Rachel sees a vision of the Virgin Mary

• Her abusive husband tries to stop her from going to the convent for bereavement therapy

• Rachel is demonically attacked in front of all the mothers – the sisters lay on hands

• One the sisters prophesies.

• The sisters deliver Rachel, but not until she levitates off the bed

• 1st half of 2nd Act: The monster is present, but hidden

• the witches curse Rachel’s best friend. She swallows her tongue and dies.

• Midpoint: Monster is worse than we thought

• Father Flynn is concerned for Rachel, but Mother Superior keeps her prisoner.

• 2nd half of 2nd Act: Monster pursuing / attacking characters, delivering clues with each attack

• Rachel’s husband is torn apart of the coven through a spell of bilocation

• 3rd Act: Characters solve the puzzle and fight back, apparently killing monster

• Rachel partakes in the Black Mass and manifests the Stigmata

• Father Flynn tries to save her but is killed by the coven

• Rachel’s stillborn baby becomes the undead vessel for possession by the spirit of Lilith

• Resolution: Lilith literally sucks the life from Rachel

[Marissa Lichwick]

Subject: (Marissa’s) Monster’s reveal

What I learned: This was a challenging assignment

(I wrote this assignment a while ago but apparently, I didn’t hit “post”.

Who is your monster and what is their terror?

Powers? Possess people, levitate children, burns people, shred skin off of people, enter into the minds of people, and take control of them.

Limitations? bound to killing only in the house, can only lure from outside the house, can’t manifest in full.

Weaknesses? Harmed by venerable religious items: cross, bible, holy water.

Plan/Purpose/Appetite? The purpose is to retrieve the teraphim (idols) at all costs. Plan: possess and enter into Adair (the central character, whose former spirit stole them) and kill her husband and children.

Who or what the monster is: Leah from the old testament was in love with Jacob (the man who truly loved Leah’s sister, Rachel.) Leah had Jacob’s children but Jacob ran off with Rachel stealing the family teraphim (idols) that Leah worships to gain secret powers to conceive children, which Rachel could not.

Act 1

The atmosphere of Evil is established: an old woman begins to have a seizure.

Demand: Why is this woman dying

Reveal: There is something about this heavy white breeze that carries an evil force

Horror Situation: the windows open violently, and curtains dance wildly as a streak of light enters the room.

Reaction – She dies.

Connect with the Characters – a family of four is living an ordinary life. They receive news about the death of their grandmother. They set out for a road trip to attend the funeral on the opposite side of the country.

Characters are warned not to do it – the central character sees a woman in cover in blood on the drive. The husband warns maybe they shouldn’t go.

Denial of Horror – central character gets aggressive and defends her family. She declares she is mourning and takes the wheels to drive the family.

Demand: to prove she is sane she takes control of the situation.

Reveal: An embedded entity begins to haunt the wife

Safety is taken away – the wife now slightly unhinged loses her way. They wander into unknown territory and get lost in the middle of nowhere. The family is scared and the husband and wife argue as to who takes charge. The wife storms off into the unknown woods.

Horror Situation – wife is wandering alone in the woods. she gets lost and separates from her family.

Reaction – lost and confused they look for each other. the wife grows confused and thinks she sees the woman in white. she begins to walk faster and faster away from the direction of the white woman. she yells for her family. The husband hears the wife and tells the kids to stay in the car. He moves deeper into the woods calling after her. The wife and husband finally find each other. They run to the car, find it and get back on the road.

Demand: this adversary may be linked to her mother.

Reveal: wife hallucinates and sees a demonic face.

Horror situation – at the family funeral the family sees a strange unknown woman. The wife hallucinates and sees her demonic face.

Reaction – They decide not to drive back to their home and move into their dead mother’s house near their living family.

MONSTER – NATURE OF THE BEAST – they discover teraphims (little idols) that conjure the demonic spirit into the home. Unknown to them, they are now cursed by the demonic spirit.

Demand: little idols are found

Reveal: a dark cloud shrouds over the house.

ACT 2 – THE POINT OF NO RETURN

Isolated / Trapped / Abducted

Horror situation – Little girl (youngest child) mysteriously disappears.

Reaction – Try to solve it – they search for her: the house, the yard, call the extended family, the police.

One of us killed – the father wakes in the middle of the night to screams of his little girl. He runs to her bedroom to find her in the arms of a woman in white covered in blood. The little girl is holding the teraphim. He lunges for her and he is burned alive.

Demand: Father has to find his little girl

Reveal: the monster is a partially formed woman in white that shreds his skin and burns him alive.

Horror situation – wife wakes and searches and finds her husband’s ashes and daughter gone.

Reaction – try to solve it – the wife takes her son, packs, and tries to leave the house. The doors are locked.

Demand: how did the doors lock?

Reveal: the house changes and shifts.

MIDPOINT – the monster is worse than we thought.

Full pursuit by the killer – son finds teraphim and it conjures the white woman right to him.

Demand: What is a teraphim, and how is it linked to the demon woman in white?

Reveal: A woman wants the person to hold the idol. She doesn’t hesitate.

Horror situation – mother looks for a safe room, but the house continues to change form.

Reaction – Mother finds a window to jump out.

Terrorized – Mother realizes that the idols are conjuring the white woman. how does she destroy the white woman?

Demand: How do you destroy the teraphim

Reveal: the woman in white seems to dislike religious icons

ACT 3 – FULL OUT HORROR

Fight to the death: She burns the idols.

Horror situation – Idols don’t burn. The white woman now seeks them out.

Demand: (figuring out the pieces) Is the woman linked to the story of the teraphim

Reveal: the white is ruthless but resists when a bible or cross is near.

Reaction – fight – mother finds and looks in the bible to understand teraphim to destroy white woman. She tries to smash the idols with a hammer.

Horror situation – idols don’t break.

Reaction – lures – mother uses idols to lure, arms herself with cross, bible, and matches.

Pursued situation – there is no escape

Horror situation – mother and son find a window. The window is locked.

Reaction – Mother smashes the window – Son jumps out.

Demand: Conflict – Son escapes

Reveal: The white woman can’t allow the boy to escape. She needs to destroy the mother to keep the son in the house.

Face to face with the Monster – White woman approaches the mother and the mother burns herself and her bible on fire.

Resolution – the son watches the house burn. The rescue team arrives and the son is taken to the hospital. He is saved.

Resolution/Sequel – he keeps the teraphim.