Lesson 7

[Lenore]

Lenore Bechtel’s Emotional Moments

My vision: I want to create enough salable screenplays that an agent will want to market my work and recommend me for writing assignments.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that every act must have 2 – 4 big emotional moments to keep the audience emotionally engaged throughout the entire movie. I was happy to find I already had emotional moments in my beat sheet, but this assignment helped me change one and intensify others.

My Title: Berlin Rendezvous?

Concept: Keeping her promise to Zhores, the Russian soldier she loved until the Berlin Wall went up in 1961, Libby—flying to meet him when the Wall is coming down in 1989—is stunned to learn how her seat-mates lives intertwined with theirs.

Dramatic triangle: Codes for this assignment are PJ for Libby, FR for Freida, and AL for Allison. The antagonist is the travel industry making it difficult for the three to get to Berlin.

Genre: Drama/Suspense

Act 1:

Surprise: Dignified Dr. Libby’s emotional monologue to the ticket agent contrasts blatantly with her business-like appearance—not what one would expect from her in a public place.

Bonding: Americans Young Libby and 10-year-old Stephanie bond with Germans Helga and 10-year-old Sonja as they layer new clothes on their bodies to sneak them into East Germany.

Excitement: A suspicious VOPO guard other than Heinz, Helga’s boyfriend, stops them at the crossing point to the East, but when Sonja sings a Young Pioneer’s song and Stephanie marches with her, the guard—deciding they must be loyal Easterners—lets them pass.

Courage: Zhores comes through the Major’s rough interrogation with such aplomb that the audience will love him from the start.

Act 2:

Wound: Heinz has two problems. He is obsessed with finding his mother who left him as a newborn with a sorrowful note outside an orphanage, and he drinks too much because of hating his job as VOPO.

Surprise: Bells ring, cars honk, sirens sound as Sputnik passes above while Young Libby and Zhores are on a date.

Betrayal: A drunken Heinz puts up orange posts and barbed wire dividing the park where Young Libby and Zhores are on a date.

Love: The Major shows his love for Young Libby by taking her into the East for one last meeting with Zhores.

Emotional dilemma: Zhores has to choose between being free with Libby in the West and staying in the East to prevent his family from being punished and to help his grandmother continue to document communist atrocities.

Act 3:

Surprise: Freida confesses that she was about to take a picture of herself wearing the pendant in a jewelry store when the earthquake hit and she ran for her apartment. She’s sure the pendent was confiscated by the Nazis from her grandmother. Knowing how much her grandmother loved it, she couldn’t bear to take it back. She knew if she was caught with it in the USA, she’d go to jail.

Excitement: Allison’s playing “Mona Lisa” in front of da Vinci’s masterpiece is a stirring moment that draws a crowd at the Louvre.

Surprise: When having trouble getting a taxi to take them to the Paris airport, Freida becomes a sexy provocateur and lures a driver to stop.

Success/winning: Heinz’s American mother found him in 1974 and wants him to come to the USA. If she had kept him at birth, her parents would have disowned her. Now she has inherited their fortune and wants to share it with him and his family.

Act 4:

Courage: When they’re stuck in traffic that will keep them from reaching Shellenberg Park on time, Allison jumps from the car, wanders through the crowd playing violin and singing. Then from the car’s hood, she motions the celebrants to spread apart for the car to get through.

Love: As Libby prays and runs a gamut of emotions making self-promises she’ll keep if her rendezvous expectations are met, the audience should be just as emotional as she is.

Success/winning: Stuart tells Freida the jewelry store proprietor was glad to see the picture of Freida wearing the pendant and especially happy with the picture of the two looters which led to their arrest. As her reward for the accidental pictures she didn’t know she took, the proprietor wants her to keep the pendant.

Excitement: Allison’s grandparents Hank and Helen confirm that Allison had her family figured out right. Stuart impregnated Olga when he and Libby visited them right after Heinz’s mother found him. So Libby is her grandmother and Freida is her step-mother.

Success/winning: Zhores arrives and Allison, Freida, and Stuart stand by through Libby’s and Zhores’ prolonged, but tearful kiss, after which Libby introduces them as Zhores’ son, daughter-in-law, and granddaughter. Helen and Hank join into a group hug with exuberant laughter, drawing passing celebrants’ cheers.

Love: When the group huggers begin a circular dance, Libby and Zhores break away, hold hands, look into each other’s eyes, and smile.

The End

[Alyssa Giannola]

Alyssa’s Emotional Moments

One Sentence Vision: To be the best writer I can be and a go-to writer in the industry, crafting scripts that become successful movies and make a lasting impact on people.

What I learned from this assignment is…picking out the main emotional moments and strengthening them. I’m not sure if I’m 100% there yet, but it’s been helpful to intentionally think about the emotional moments throughout and make sure they’re present in every act.

ACT ONE

• Wound: Alex watches his father commit murder-suicide w/ his mother while barely escaping with his own life at 8 years old.
• Emotional Dilemma: Alex has to choose between saving his assistant/friend OR his experiment. Either she dies or he loses what he’s been working on for years.
• Distress: Alex sits on the curb and watches robots carry the dead body of his friend as smoke pours out of the hole in his lab. Alex lost two things he cared about in the same moment.

ACT TWO

• Moral Dilemma: Alex has to agree to let go of his obsession before Celia will help him; his survival vs his ambition, the latter he considers “for the greater good.”
• Courage: Alex tries to save the church member instead of running to save himself, showing that he’s starting to change and mirroring what he should have done with his friend.
• Bonding: Alex and Celia work together to temporarily defeat Nijara and escape, both using their unique skills which complement each other and remind them why they’re good together.

ACT THREE

• Hidden Weakness: In the lab, Alex stubbornly keeps working on the serum even when the incineration process starts and the assassin shows up, putting Celia’s life in danger too- which he realizes belatedly (he’s slowly changing).
• Breakthrough: Waiting to see if he dies without his band, Alex finally tells Celia that it was his fault his father received the Death Fortune and how it’s shaped his whole life. Celia takes his good hand and he finally realizes what he’s sacrificed because of guilt.
• Success/Winning: Once the clock runs out, Alex doesn’t die- the serum, Alex’s life work, actually WORKS.

ACT FOUR

• Courage: Alex drives his car into the robots to save Celia instead of running.
• Sacrifice/Love: When Celia is forced to pull a gun on Alex, he walks up to her and encourages her to stop fighting and do it- if she does, she can save herself, even though he will die.
• Betrayal: Parker fatally shoots Alex in front of Celia and they realize he’s been their enemy this whole time.

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[Marguerite Langstaff]

Module 4 Lesson 7: Depth -emotional moments

Marguerite Langstaff: The Billionaire in 501

Vision: I want to learn to write and market movie scripts.

What I learned doing this assignment:

State/Activity: I absolutely love causing my audience to feel emotional.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that I will consciously have to look for the emotional moments for my audience to relate to and make sure that they, not just I, are relating to them. I also learned to study the negative, as well as the positive, emotions.

Act 1. BONDING:

Pappy and GM bond when GM goes through the lobby picking up somebody elses dropped oranges, and Pappy follows along telling the woman pushing the walker and dropping her groceries to “say thankyou.”

HIDDEN WEAKNESS:

When GM checks her checkbook and knows for certain that she is so short of money she hasn’t the funds to pay the rent at Hidden Acres. She knows that she has spent 100% of her money on a fly by night stock which tanked.

Act 2: Success: GM sets out to make friends, and she accomplishes that when she bonds and makes friends with Gladys, a lady on a walker who is outspoken, and who bonds and makes friends with GM.

Love: 10 year old grandson Sam begins coming to Shady Acres after school to stay with GM until his Dad picks him up, and he and GM instantly bond with their grandparent relationship, and their need for each other. He teaches her to work the computer, and she teaches him to know that he can accomplish anything he sets out to do.

Act 3: Emotional Dilemma: Pappy obviously woos GM, and she likes him, but since he wants to boss her around and tell her how to do everything and what to do and what to think and feel she doesn’t want to continue the relationship. She values her independence and up to a point has confidence in herself.

Hidden weakness: The weakness of the original business idea to sell things “at a market” fails miserably and there is great sorrow among GM.s friends and all the people at Shady Acres. They had been so excited and optimistic, and the massive failure made them settle into a retirement blue funk stage again.

Act 4: Breakthrough: When the major success of GM’s advice column and her personal financial windfall is disclosed the entire community at Shady Acres celebrates.

Love: Love blossoms at Shady Acres when Pappy and GM step out on a wonderful date….dressed to the nines, into a waiting limo, and cheered on by GM’s new friends at Shady Acres.

[H. Vince]

H. Vince’s Emotional Moments

WIM Module 4 – 2023

Lesson 7: Depth – Emotional Moments

My Vision: I am going to be a professional screenwriter.

What I learned from doing this assignment is…

That I need to add more soon and switch around the series of events to make the story flow and really gain that emotional rollercoaster.

TITLE: DREAM VACATION

GENRE: DRAMA/THRILLER

MAIN CONFLICT:

James starts developing dementia while he and his wife, Clara are on their retirement vacation. Clara has to take care of James and try to bring him back to the U.S. all while trying to figure out what happened to her husband.

ACT 1: VACATION AND MEMORY LOSS

POSTIVE: James and Clara start out their vacation with what seems like an incredible marriage bond, excited to finally go on the vacation they have worked their whole lives for and deserved and dreamed of. They are smiling, holding hands, saying they can’t believe it’s finally here. James tells Clara he planned a couple of good surprises and she’s in wonder what those surprises could be.

Flashback when James has hope that he can have a fun, relaxing vacation if he takes this clinical trial edible the doctor recommended.

NEGATIVE: James starts acting strange, forgetful, asks where he is, asks who Clara is. Clara is confused, scared, hit with a huge dilemma of what to do next.

Flashback when James tells his doctor about his overwhelming anxiety.

Act 2: GO HOME AND DISAPPEARANCE

POSITIVE: Clara finds hope in making a goal to get her husband back to the U.S. to a familiar life.

NEGATIVE: The stress and fear are apparent over the phone when Clara calls her grown children to tell them about their dad.

When Clara wakes up in the morning and finds that James has disappeared, overwhelming emotion and tears immediately manifest. She feels helpless and frightened for James.

Act 3: FIND JAMES

POSITIVE: Clara gets help to find James and the clues of where he may gone with people who had last seen him and learning about an old familiar place in a foreign country makes her feel more at ease and hopeful.

The person that helps Clara develops an emotional admiration that Clara is willing to go to great lengths to help her husband.

NEGATIVE: Clara fears that James may be hurt or worse if he can’t identify himself or others and is roaming around lost in an unfamiliar place.

Meanwhile Dr. Ria is getting anxious himself when more results from the clinical trial start pouring in. Maybe make another patient’s family come to his office to confront him!

Act 4 Climax and Resolution

POSITIVE: Grown child finally arrives and Clara is relieved to have a very close family member in a foreign country for support.

When James starts gaining his memory back, his family is ecstatic and relieved.

NEGATIVE: When the doctor finds out that James took an edible as a clinical trial medication and it’s being reported as causing accelerated memory loss, Clara is outraged. Clara goes through the emotions of being outraged at James for not telling her what’s going on and keeping things from her and then she is outraged that this directly affected her without her knowledge.

Dr. Ria receives notice that he is being sued and his medical license may be in jeopardy. He expresses anger and fear and tells his pharmaceutical contact that it wasn’t worth the money involved.

James feels guilt and failure for their vacation being ruined by the edible he decided to take.

Clara feels defeated that she now has cancer and that life isn’t always how you expect it to go.

[Lloyd Shellenberger]

Lloyd Shellenberger WIM Module 4 Lesson 7 Depth Emotional Moments

My Vision Working hard every day to become the best writer in Hollywood and as a result I do become the best writer in Hollywood.

What I learned from this lesson is how to map out the possible emotions tied to the actions of my characters.

Title: Letters from Baghdad

Genre: Action-Drama

Act 1 Emotions:

Positive Emotional Moment as the Interpreter saves the life of SFC Reese.

Negative Emotional Moment: An open wound is revealed. The child and mother that are killed in the bombing reminds him of losing his brother in a drive by shooting.

Courage: Both Reese and his interpreter show incredible courage under fire trying to save lives.

Moral Issue: SFC Reese begins to question what it is he and his soldiers are doing and why after the bombing.

Act 1: Routine patrol turns deadly as the terrorists, Al-Sadar, targets SFC Reese and his men at an open -air market in downtown Baghdad.

Inciting incident: Al-Sadar sets off several daisy chained bombs after taunting Reese and his men. Reese and his men give chase not realizing it was a setup to an ambush.

Act 2 Emotions:

Betrayal Why was the interpreter denied asylum? We will gladly put them in harms way but do nothing to help them. It is a philosophy that rubs Reese the wrong way.

Moral Issue: The interpreter is killed, and the widow left behind, there is no good reason for it. Reese has failed to protect him and his family with no positive outcome.

Loss/Failure Reese and his men were not able to save the father. It is a wound that goes straight to the heart of why Reese and his soldiers are in Iraq. Reese also lost a soldier. It is a bitter pill to swallow.

Hatred and obsession. Reese is obsessed with killing Al-Sadar. He killed the gang members that killed his brother so he is well acquainted with the emotion of revenge.

Act 2: The Interpreter receives the news he was denied an asylum Visa by the State Department.

Inciting incident 2: Terrorists return the next day, but despite the American soldiers waiting for him, Al-Sadar kills the father in front of his children. The QRF intervenes and saves Reese and the family. One soldier is killed.

Act 3: Emotions

Bonding Reese and his men have now bonded with the widow and her children. They will fight to the last man to save her.

Sacrifice Reese and his men face disciplinary measure for leaving the post after hours and Reese is actively seeking Al-Sadar sometimes on his own outside the wire. His command finds out and has a problem with this.

Act 3: SFC Reese and his men are committed to helping the widow at all costs. The old ways of ignoring the suffering of the Iraqi people are gone. Reese has now developed a relationship with the children. Reese intervenes on behalf of the family with the State Department after finding the denial letter. The State Department denies him.

Inciting Incident: Al-Sadar attempts to kill the widow and her children again. He is unsuccessful. Al-Sadar is wounded during the attack. Al-Sadar vows revenge. Meanwhile attacks in the Baghdad area have increased.

A CODEL visits the embassy in Baghdad. Reese convinces the South Dakota Congressman to visit the home of the widow and the children. This convinces the Congressperson to sponsor the family, forcing the State Department to issue an Asylum Visa.

Act 4: Emotions

Distress: As military casualties mount Reese finally has a breakthrough in discovering who Al-Sadar is. Reese promises the Army he can bring Al-Sadar alive, but he has no intention of that.

Courage: Reese and his men meet Al-Sadar, and his men head on at Haifa Street. This is a duel to the death, take no prisoners type of situation.

Mutual Wounds: Reese and his men are on the same page since they also lost their fellow soldier. They want Al-Sadar as badly as Reese does. The wound is what drives them to take extraordinary chances at the end of their tour.

Sacrifice: Reese and his men are willing to sacrifice their careers to help this family. Reese is now keenly aware of the suffering the Iraqi people have endured.

Reese is now at peace and forgives himself for his brother’s death. There is a moment when Reese calls his parents and you know he is finally redeemed.

Act 4: Reese and his men are reprimanded by the unit and the State Department for intervening. It looks like his career may be over.

Inciting Incident: Attacks in the Baghdad area have taken the life of another Interpreter along with the soldiers from a roadside bomb. Military intelligence gets information to the whereabouts of Al-Sadar and his men.

Reese and his men have one last chance to bring down Al-Sadar. In an epic street battle on Haifa Street, they find and kill him. Reese tells him the Hydra is dead.

The Widow and her children are allowed to see the father’s grave. SFC Reese and his men escort them to a military transport and send them to America. Reese vows one day to see the family again.

[Ruthie Harris]

Ruthie’s Emotional Moments.

What I learnt: To have a list of the emotions handy, to remind you to incorporate them into as many scenes as possible. And to ensure that both negative and positive emotions are represented.

ACT 1:

Surprise: Zadie’s been caught speeding and leads the cop car to her next appointment: At the courthouse for traffic offences.

Bonding: She does her best to banter with the judge, even offering to get him his own show but he’s having none of it. Until the very end when we see he’s cracked a smile and Zadie has won him over.

Hidden weakness: When Zadie returns to her office, we see her having to psyche herself up in her closet, due to her imposter syndrome. Her big personality is all a front.

Surprise: Zadie’s Uber driver is former teen star Jasper Benjamin, and the pair descend into a riotous altercation.

Courage/Excitement: At an engagement party at an indoor skydiving center, Zadie meets an indy film director and in order to gain an audition for her client, conquers her fears, dons a flight suit and goes for it.

Bonding: At a nail salon, Jasper is having a pedicure and Zadie sneaks in to take over from the technician. After an initial back and forth, they are finally bonding since Zadie has an audition for him.

Courage: To prove herself to a potential new client, Zadie wades into the middle of a skate park half pipe, as skaters zoom all around her.

Success/Winning: Jasper nails the audition, it’s like lightening in a bottle.

Bonding: Zadie finds Jasper at a car wash and comes to tell him the good news about his call back.

Emotional Dilemma: At Jasper’s call back, the casting director overhears Zadie running lines with Jasper and asks her to audition as well.

Betrayal: At a department store changing room, Zadie discovers she’s won the role instead, and must break the news to Jasper.

ACT 2:

Wound/Betrayal: Jasper storms in unannounced and goes on a tirade against Zadie in front of all her colleagues.

Betrayal: Jasper is poached by rival agent, Emily “mutherfucking” Patterson.

Surprise/Bonding/Wound: Zadie is bemoaning the fact that clients are leaving the agency to her assistant Audrey. Reveal: Audrey is actually Zadie’s daughter.

Success/Winning: The movie goes into production and Zadie has a complete blast making it.

Success/Winning: Months later the movie is a success and Zadie is an overnight sensation.

Surprise: Paparazzi have swarmed Zadie’s office building. She thinks they’re there for her clients.

Reveal: They’re actually there for Zadie.

Wound: A paparazzi makes a snide comment about Zadie’s curvaceous body.

Surprise: Zadie is photographed kissing comic Ledicia Harding and she’s embraced by the LGTBQ+ community.

ACT 3:

Distress: Setup: Zadie is fired from her agency.

Success/Winning: She’s been nominated for a major acting award.

Betrayal: Jasper starts a chat show from his cab and his first guest is Ledicia. Zadie is “outed’ as straight.

ACT 4:

Distress: Zadie’s hiding out in her closet due to the backlash on social media from the LGBTQ_ community for not being “straight” with them.

Surprise: Audrey turns up to say that There’s a lot of love for Zadie on line for turning down the Weight Watchers campaign and embracing body positivity. There’s also a hilarious apology video from Ledicia, that’s gone viral for outing her as straight.

Sacrifice: Zadie wins the award. She turns it down, saying it should have gone to Jasper.

Surprise/Success/Winning: Zadie hands cash over to the fat-shaming paparazzi outside her brand-new agency.

Surprise/Success/Winning: In her new office, Zadie’s on the phone congratulating her client Ledicia on her comedy special. Reveal: Zadie recruited Ledicia into her big scheme.

Surprise/Success/Winning: Jasper arrives, and the pair immediately start passionately kissing. He’s just landed the lead in an action trilogy. Reveal: Zadie and Jasper became lovers. Zadie decided to leverage her impending fame, to hoodwink Hollywood and finally get them both what they wanted.

[Margaret]

Margaret’s Emotional Moments

Vision: To be the best screenwriter for faith-based movies

What I learned: I had already built in a lot of emotional moments, but didn’t realize there were many scenes that could be emotional moments if written with that in mind.

Opening: A crow flies over Mt. Cruachan. Standing on an outcropping of rock, MORRIGAN, the queen of the otherworld, looks as if she is in a trance, seeing a vision. She breaks out of the trance, screaming that Ireland is hers, the people are hers, no one will take them from her. (Setup – What she sees is secret, but it is a reveal to her that a human will take the allegiance of the Irish away from her and turn their hearts to God.) EXCITEMENT

Inciting Incident: A boy (TEEN PATRICK), running away from his father’s plan to have him serve in the church, and his sister, ALITA, are kidnapped and taken to Ireland. COURAGE

Patrick watches the sheep, a slave of Milcho. He turns to God for solace in his slavery. DISTRESS

By page 10, you know what the movie is about: Morrigan enlists Bacrah to seek and destroy Patrick (Setup – she knows he is the one who will turn the hearts of the Irish.)

Bacrah sets it up so a lamb falls into the river, hoping Patrick will try to save it and drown.

Patrick worships God in a lonely field as he watches the sheep. A lamb falls into the river. Patrick awakes to see a struggling lamb in the river. Patrick asks God to help him save the lamb. The lamb dies. (Setup – Patrick doubting God hears later) COURAGE

Bacrah tells Milcho he must turn Patrick over to him, to serve the high king as a druid.(Setup – Bacrah attempts this as leverage with Morrigan.) DISTRESS

Milcho warns Patrick, and Patrick dreams he must return to England. Milcho expresses his regret for enslaving others – remorse. Tells Patrick not to waste his youth and potential under the control of others. (Setup – Milcho later kills himself as part of Morrigan’s control over his life)

Patrick heads towards the coast and freedom.

On his journey, Patrick is confronted by a savage wolf (Bacrah). Patrick cries out to God. The angel Victor saves Patrick. The wolf whines and backs away. Patrick recognizes God’s power and commits his life to serve him. (Setup – the wolf is actually Bacrah) DISTRESS, COURAGE

Morrigan berates Bacrah for his failure. Gives him a dire warning but states he may still be of some use, tells Bacrah he must be ready to serve.(Setup for Morrigan’s control over Bacrah and his desire to break that control.)

Patrick is weak from his journey from lack of food, falls unconscious. DISTRESS

Morrigan taunts him in a dream, saying he is not good enough to live, after causing the capture of his sister, the death of the lamb, and warning his parents will reject him for allowing Alita’s kidnapping (Reveal – Patrick’s guilt over past actions) HIDDEN WEAKNESS

A starving Patrick is saved by a family in a remote area, fends off the temptation to stay with them.

Morrigan, shapeshifted into an Irish peasant girl, attempts to seduce Patrick so that he cannot fulfill the prophecy. (Setup – later reveal that it was Morrigan) MORAL ISSUE

Patrick leaves the peasant family, finds passage back to England.

Morrigan, shapeshifted into a sailor, helps Patrick gain passage onto a ship so that he will leave Ireland. . (Setup – later reveal that it was Morrigan)

Morrigan stirs up a storm and Patrick is shipwrecked. (Setup – Morrigan can control nature – we don’t know Morrigan set up the storm here.) EXCITEMENT

Patrick and the sailors attempt to cross a desert, are miraculously saved from starvation after Patrick prays for them. (Reveal – Patrick can perform miracles by praying)

At home in England, Patrick dreams of the Irish calling him back to Ireland. He decides to become a priest.

Patrick’s parent ask him to stay in England, work in a parish there. They beg him to not make them face losing their son again, especially since they are older and have no one to care for them. Patrick questions his own resolve to go back to Ireland. (Reveal – Patrick’s guilt over past action.) WOUND

First turning point at end of Act 1: Patrick, now an ordained priest, keeps his vow, leaves for Ireland. COURAGE

Act 2:

New Plan: Evangelize the Irish.

New Plan in Action: Patrick returns to his former Master, MILCHO, to evangelize him.

Morrigan thwarts Patrick’s plan by threatening Milcho with an afterlife of torture if he listens to Patrick. (Reveal – Milcho is under Morrigan’s control)

Mid-Point Turning Point: Influenced by Morrigan, Patrick’s previous master commits suicide rather than be converted to Christianity. DISTRESS

Patrick defames the sun god’s rocks, turns them into crosses, vows to turn the hearts of the Irish to God. (Setup – for Patrick’s cross seen later)

Morrigan sends a flash flood, washes away the crosses. (Reveal – Morrigan can control nature)

Morrigan sends a thick fog, makes it impossible for Patrick to find his way.

A blind beggar to show him the way out of the fog. The beggar tells Patrick he can do the most good by helping the blind, he can serve God by helping him. He tells him that only the King can make the decision of the people to follow Christianity and that it is futile. He tells him Morrigan is a good god and he can best serve the Irish by helping her feed and help the distressed of the land. He states Morrigan will bless him with riches and power if he follows her. (Setup – a test from God to see Patrick’s allegiance). EMOTIONAL DILEMMA

Patrick rejects the beggar’s philosophy, vows to go to the King and do whatever he can to convert him. The angel Victor appears, states he has passed his test, blesses his journey.(Reveal– test from God.)

Act 3.

Rethink everything: On his way to the king, Patrick is met by druids controlled by Morrigan. They attempt to show him that their traditional beliefs are superior to Patrick’s teachings. Patrick rejects them and by the power of God keeps the druids from killing him. MORAL ISSUE

Morrigan attempts to keep Patrick from the King. She orders the chief druid of the high king, Bacrah, to keep Patrick from the lesser king. (Reveal: Morrigan calls in Bacrah’s debt. Setup – Bacrah’s wish to be free from her control.)

Bacrah uses magic to convince the lesser king to follow Morrigan but Patrick’s power is greater. (Setup for Dubtach’s “conversion” and Bacrah’s doubt in Morrigan’s power.)

One of the druids, DUBTACH, sees Patrick’s power and converts. (Setup – Dubtach does not truly convert and later betrays Patrick). SUCCESS/WINNING

Patrick attempts to evangelize King Loeghaire.

Morrigan strikes the king dead so that the people will not turn to Patrick’s God but a message from King Eochaid allows him to send Patrick away.

Before sending Patrick away, Patrick sees a woman he thinks is his sister and asks King Loeghaire for her freedom. King Eochaid gifts the woman to Patrick. (Setup – Patrick thinks this is his sister but is just a servant girl). LOVE

Patrick discovers the servant (Lizzie) is not his sister. Patrick treats her with respect and takes her with him to free her from her enslavement. (Reveal, setup for Lizzie’s loyalty) BONDING

Patrick arrives before King Eochaid who asks him to ensure his captured son is freed from another king. Dubtach assures the king of Patrick’s power. Patrick prays for the king’s son. (Setup – Dubtach’s belief in Patrick’s power is why he converted, not to serve God.)

King Eochaid’s son is released. King Eochaid wants to learn the Christian way. A crow flies in and King Eochaid has a heart attack. (Setup – the Crow is Morrigan and King Eochaid realizes she is against his curiosity).

Patrick, Lizzie, and Dubtach are thrown into prison for supposedly casting a spell on King Eochaid. Patrick accepts imprisonment which turns Dubtach’s heart away. Lizzie sees Patrick’s reaction and turns to God. (Reveal: Dubtach is only after power. Setup – Lizzie willing to give her life for Patrick later.) SACRIFICE

King Eochaid sends Patrick to the High King. Warns of Bacrah’s and Morrigan’s power. (Setup for the showdown between Patrick and Morrigan/Bacrah).

New Plan: Go after the High King!

A banshee appears, foretells of Lizzie’s death during a sudden storm if Patrick doesn’t turn from his course. Patrick refused. (Setup – Lizzie’s death) EMOTIONAL DILEMMA

Patrick goes on his way, unbeknownst to him, Morrigan shapeshifts from banshee to herself, to a crow and flies off. (Reveal: Patrick is the human Morrigan fears and she has been shapeshifting to prevent him from evangelizing.)

Turning point at end of Act 3: The people fear both Patrick and Morrigan. The High King states he will only listen to Patrick if he faces Morrigan.

Patrick, Dubtach, and Lizzie arrive at the high king’s castle. Bacrah faces them and Dubtach betrays Patrick. (Reveal: Dubtach’s true character and the prophesy about Patrick.) BETRAYAL

Bacrah threatens Lizzie’s life to control Patrick. Lizzie sacrifices her life so she will not be used by Bacrah. (Reveal – Lizzie is a true convert. Setup– Bacrah realizing how he can escape Morrigan’s clutches.) SACRIFICE

Patrick is sent to the dungeon. He deals with his own self-pity and guilt. Overcomes to stand firm in his faith. (Reveal – Patrick’s resolve to follow God and his own guilty feelings.) WOUND/COURAGE

Patrick is brought before King Aengus. Bacrah is commissioned to take Patrick to Mt. Cruachan and face Morrigan. (Setup for showdown with Morrigan)

Patrick climbs Mount Cruachan to pray and faces the onslaught of the otherworld. Before he arrives, he sees a peasant woman by a stream (Morrigan) washing clothes soaked with blood. As she rinses them out, he sees that they are his clothes. She disappears, leaves him wondering if he is on his way to his death. (Setup for us thinking Patrick will die). DISTRESS

Patrick enters a cave and finds Alita (Morrigan shapeshifted). She tells Patrick she has learned the truth – that Morrigan is the true god. Patrick is almost convinced by her but then quotes Scripture to strengthen his faith. (Setup – we think Alita is alive). MORAL ISSUE

Morrigan reveals she is shapeshifted into Alita’s form. She sends snakes to attack Patrick. (Reveal)

Patrick sends the snakes from cave, banishes them from Ireland. (Reveal: Patrick’s power)

Morrigan attempts to turn Patrick from his mission. Patrick refuses to bow to her and show fear. In her anger, she blasts a piece of the mountain away, hurls it into the valley where it is eventually named the Rock of Cashel, vowing that he will never win the hearts of the Irish. COURAGE

Act 4:

Crisis: Patrick cannot overcome the otherworld creatures and is consumed by doubt and fear. He is faced with his own motivation for evangelizing and comes to understand that the Irish are enslaved by a religion based on fear and his own tactics have only increased their fear.(Reveal) He realizes that if he loves the Irish, he must show them the power of God’s love. He decides to return to the High King and share the message of God’s love and forgiveness without relying on the powerful signs that evoke fear, even if it means his death. SACRIFICE

Climax: As Patrick nears the castle, he is challenged by Morrigan and the underworld creatures, who fight to destroy him and the king’s army rather than see the Irish leave their paganism. EXCITEMENT

Bacrah sees Patrick’s conviction, gives his life to destroy Morrigan’s dragon, turning the fight so that the King’s soldiers are winning. (Reveal: Bacrah gives his life to God to free himself from Morrigan’s power) SACRIFICE

Resolution: When the king hears Patrick’s message of God’s love and promise of freedom from fear, he accepts Patrick’s God. SUCCESS/WINNING

Morrigan is banished by the High King. SUCCESS/WINNING

Epilogue: Patrick ministers at a church set on the Rock of Cashel.

[Brian Bull]

BRIAN BULL – Emotional Moments

VISION!!!
My ultimate goal is to get my scripts from my hands to the SILVER SCREEN!!

“What I learned from doing this assignment is…
It’s so important to have emotion in every scene and every act.

The ONE THAT GOT AWAY – A Fisherman’s Tale
While fishing, a fisherman reflects on all the events that have lead to his present state of determination to catch the fish that has eluded him for 25 years which he blames for his younger brother’s death, however, in the end, it turns out the fisherman is the one who had gotten away.

GENRE: DRAMA

“Fishing is the art of lying convincingly about the size of the fish that got away.” -Unknown

ACT 1
WOUND: John respectfully places Jim’s fishing hat on the seat where Jim would be sitting if Jim were there.

BONDING: JOHN IS VERY EXCITED TO BE FISHING WITH HIS DAD
Dad is task with getting the fishing equipment out.
Dad teaching John how to tie a fisherman’s knot.
Shows him how to cast.
Family is important.

BONDING: JOHN INSISTS JIM TO BE CALM THOUGH JIM ALREADY IS
John teaching his younger brother how to tie a fisherman’s knot.
Teaches Jim how to cast – takes on that FATHER ROLE MODEL.
John tells Jim about their dad and how he taught John how to fish.
Bonding between John/Jim – GIVES JIM SOME FISHING QUOTES
Family is so important.

LOVE:
A picture of Grandpa in the tackle box
Grandpa caught a massive catfish
John wants to be like Grandpa.

EXCITEMENT: John catches a good size catfish – THAT’S HOW IT’S DONE!

HIDDEN WEAKNESS / DISTRESS: Wife reminds John of his failures – nothing to show for his past attempts – sowing doubt.

EMOTIONAL DILEMMA: Wife thinks John should give up and spend time with their son – tries to redirect John and have him focus on the present and not the past.

DISTRESS: Wife suggests trying a different bait – John replies, “NEVER!!!” Wife suggestions are contradictory to John’s beliefs.

WOUND: Wife mentions John’s father running off, never to be heard from again – he’s not going to do that is he? DEFENDS HIS FATHER’S REPUTATION AND DIVERTS THE SUBJECTS

ACT 2
BONDING:
The brothers are fishing again, not having much luck.
Jim catches a “StIck Bass” – BOTH BROTHERS JOKE ABOUT THIS
Jim gives up on fishing because of the “Stick Bass”.
John reels his line in and his hook is empty.
They have run out of bait.
Not giving up, John decides to try chicken from their sandwiches that their mom packed – something special she said, they might like.
Jim gives John a hard time about switching bait to chicken – likely to catch a ‘gator with it –
John’s determined to catch something before going home.

EXCITEMENT:
John catches a “BIG ONE”!!!
John struggles as he tries to reel in “The Fish”.

DISTRESS:
Jim wants John to cut the line and let it go.

SUCCESS/WINNING:
John refuses – THIS IS IT!!! John’s determination to catch this fish kicks in!!!

DISTRESS:
Jim is worried as he watches John as John tries with all his might to reel the fish in.

SURPRISE:
John gets pulled into the water.

EMOTIONAL DILEMMA:
JIM LOOKS AT THE KNIFE BY THE LIFE PRESERVERS – GRABS THE KNIFE!

COURAGE / SACRIFICE:
Jim dives into the water with a knife and cuts the line.

DISTRESS:
John emerges from the water and gets back into the boat.
Jim never resurfaces.
John is left all alone in the boat with the realization Jim is gone – DEVASTATION!

ACT 3
WOUND / LOVE:
Since “The Incident”, John has gone fishing for “The Fish” for 25 years.
Jim’s photo hangs in the garage and is a constant reminder of his failure at redemption!
John takes the photo down and holds it in deep in thought – we know what he is thinking by the look on his face.
John uncovers Jim’s fishing hat and packs it.
The hat reinforces John’s determination to seek revenge and avenge Jim’s death!

WOUND / LOVE: JOHN HAS AN IMAGINARY CONVERSATION WITH JIM
JIM TELLS JOHN HE DOESN’T HAVE TO DO THIS
John takes Jim’s fishing hat and places it on his head for good luck.
JOHN SAYS HE DOES

ACT 4
EXCITEMENT:
John hooks “The Fish” and the power struggle begins, many of the same tactics “The Fish” used when he was a kid are used again, but John is prepared for each one of them.

EMOTIONAL DILEMMA:
JOHN SEES THE KNIFE – MOMENT OF TRUTH – DECIDES TO END THIS ONCE-AND-FOR-ALL

WINNING / SUCCESS:
He manages to reel “The Fish” in; just a little closer so he can harpoon it with his spear.
Face-to-face with “The Fish” John sees that he has indeed managed to catch the biggest catfish in Louisiana history!!!

SURPRISE:
John then realizes, “I’m the one you were after – I’m the One That Got Away!”
Leaning over the edge of the boat, John is engulfed by “The Fish” thus leaving an empty fishing boat floating in the midst of the water.
Jim’s fishing hat floats a short distance away from the boat.

[Melissa Barreca]

Melissa Barreca’s Emotional Moments

My vision: Melissa Barreca is one of the most sought after writers in the movie industry because of the artistry of her writing, professionalism and exceptional ability to tell important, entertaining, joyful, and heartbreaking stories that inspire audiences and become legendary classics.

What I learned…Sometimes the emotions that the audience should feel are the same as the characters on the screen and sometimes they are not. Good to focus on this in the outline.<div>

Torn Away

Act 1

Excitement – Empathy/Character Intro Protagonist, Norah Murphy – An immigrant family helps their daughter and son-in-law pack and depart for America.

Excitement – PJ1 Norah – Arrival at port; beginning journey to America.

Uneasiness – Wretched arrival in NYC/Ellis Island. Chaos; the family is worn and emaciated from a hard journey; expectations are shattered.

Relief – Mick meets them at the gate. Empathy/Character Intro, Antagonist, Mick Kilcullen

Distress – PJ2 – Settling in a new land. Arriving in the Five Points, the stench is unbearable and the new family is appalled at the pitiful sight of poor beggars and street children everywhere.

Pity – We see the adoption agents working on the street with poor children.

Empathy – Arrival at the apartment. They are saddened by the bare room with dirt everywhere, but neighbors continue to pour in with offerings of a bit of food or a shawl or blanket to welcome them and it warms their hearts.

Joy – A baby girl is born. PJ3 – Norah, Doyle and their many neighbors celebrate the birth of this new child and also share their plight.

Shock – AJ2 – Turning Point: A night at the local parlor and too much whiskey leads Mick and Doyle into a fight. Doyle into a bad deal that leads him into trouble with criminals who beat him and leave him for dead.

Sadness – PJ4 – Inciting Incident – Mick comes to Norah and tells her that Doyle is “killed at the factory.”

Sadness – PJ5 – Norah’s older children begin to spend time on the street and try to earn money to help the family – they are seven and four years old.

Anger – Mick does not approve and tells her that her kids should be sent away for a better life.

Fear – One of the subleasers comes down with a horrible cough. The sickness spreads.

Despair – PJ6 – Turning Point: Norah loses her infant daughter to cholera.

Act 2

Worry – PJ1 – Starving and Freezing – Norah is resisting full reliance on Mick and has only taken his charity, but it is not enough to help her feed her children and keep their apartment heated in New York’s brutal winter.

Anger – Mick treats the children horribly and is possessive over Norah.

Anger – Mick forces himself on Norah. He makes it clear that he is not looking to get married. Norah doesn’t dare make a sound or stop him because the children are nearby and she doesn’t want them to be hurt or know.

Worry – She begins to drink at the grocery in their building. At first it’s just a drink or two.

Anger/Worry – AJ1 – Killing Themselves – Mick is losing patience with Norah’s insistence on keeping the children and tells her that she is selfish for keeping her children. Norah drinks some more and cries.

Frustration – Mick is shown to be withholding his money from providing food and clothing to the kids, but Norah is unaware of how much money he is not sharing and how much he spends at the saloon.

Outrage – AJ2 – Taken In – as the children beg, Mick has had enough. He takes them to the local foundation and tells the workers they need to be adopted.

Outrage/Frustration – He tells Norah the kids were taken off the street. She doesn’t know he was involved.

Impossible choice – PJ3 – Norah is summoned. She is drinking again. She tearfully agrees and believes she has no choice but to let them go.

Despair – Norah brings the children to the charity and surrenders them. The separation is agonizing.

Sadness – She gets pregnant and miscarries.

Hope – Midpoint: A chance meeting with an old neighbor at the grocery bar who “was surprised she allowed Mick to take her beautiful children away” causes Norah to become aware that she was manipulated by Mick.

Desire for justice – AJ3: Mick has made Norah his own. We see their domestic “bliss” play out with Norah going through the motions as his “wife” and Mick telling her that she is not good enough.

Betrayal/hope – PJ4/Turning Point 2 – A Spark Moment – Mick nonchalantly tells Norah he has sold her wedding veil to pay for some whiskey. She is heartbroken and something in her snaps and she sees him for who he is. She has lost her last memento that reminds her of Doyle and her old life with the children. We see her take the last bit of whiskey in her glass and pour it into the chamber pot.

Hope/pride – PJ5 – Plan in action – Norah secretly meets the adoption agent who knows about her children. We have seen this man at work with the children and we know he is good.

Pride/excitement – PJ6 – Norah talks with a trusted neighbor and hatches a plan. She cannot support the kids. Her adoption agent has assured her that the kids are happy in a home of wealthy and loving parents.

Anger – Mick follows Norah to the adoption agency and finds out Norah has been plotting. When she arrives at their apartment, he threatens her life and flies off the handle in a drunken rage.

Disbelief – PJ8 – Placated again – Norah calms Mick with more whiskey and swears that she doesn’t want her children. He passes out.

Act 3

Fear – AJ1 Mick awakes to find that Norah is gone. He breaks the few items of furniture they have in a fit of rage.

Excitement/hope – Norah is at the adoption agency and talking with children as she waits to meet her contacts. It is bittersweet.

Gladness – PJ1 – Orphan Train – Norah is boarding a train with adoption agents and children that are to be adopted, they have offered to bring her along on the journey in the hopes of reuniting her with her children.

Love/joy – Turning Point 3: Norah is reunited with her children.

Fear – AJ2 – Mick has gone off the deep end. He is back in the neighborhood looking for Norah.

When Mick finds her friend with information, he interrogates her and ends up killing her.

Act 4

Shock/surprise – Act 4 Major Shift: Norah is working in the yard alone and is grabbed from behind and dragged off into a barn. We do not see her assailant.

Shock/surprise – PJ1 – Climax – Norah fights back. In the barn, it’s an all out brawl in the dark. The attacker fiercely beats her and attempts to tie her up. Major Reveal: The subdued Norah is tied and she is dragged into the light. Her attacker is Doyle.

Outrage – AJ1 – Mick arrives in a carriage to take Norah back to New York.

Disgust – The men discuss the exchange. We find out that Doyle was the reason that she was “given” to Mick. He has returned to find her and bring her back to Mick.

Shock/relief – AJ2 – The disillusioned Mick still believes that Norah will go back with him and believes that he has won the battle, she is too weak to fight back. He tries to take Norah into the carriage, but she is able to push him onto a pitchfork and kills him

Revenge – PJ2 – With Mick’s blood on her hands, Norah turns to her betrayer, Doyle. She is having a complete fit of rage. She lunges at Doyle with a shovel badly injuring him.

Anger/pity – AJ3 – Doyle is backed into a corner. He admits that he has been tracking her since she left, lurking in the shadows, waiting for his moment.

Shock/surprise – He cries out in sorrow and tells her he is also sorry for her sister. He confesses that he knows what happened to her sister and that Mick caused her accident and lied. She drowned and they never told anyone.

Relief – PJ3 – The family runs to the barn. They see the carnage of Mick, and the cowering pathetic Doyle, and the glassy-eyed Norah and rush to her aid.

Safety/love – The husband subdues Doyle and summons the police.

Joy – The family agrees to allow Norah and the kids to stay, and Norah can raise them as part of one big extended family.

Joy/pride/love – Final scene – The adoption agent is visiting the family in the yard. He sips tea with the family as the kids run through emerald fields laughing and singing.

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[Veronica Turowski]

Veronica Turowski’s Emotional Moments

My Vision: I want to be a successful writer who writes several scripts yearly and then sells them to producers who create my vision for the big screen.

Concept: After a professional mourner is told by a ghost during his funeral that he was murdered by a serial killer, she tries to prove him wrong so he can pass over, only to discover that she is a ghost and is the mother of the serial killer.

Title: Grave Justice

Genre: Supernatural Thriller

ACT 1: Lonnie is checking the chemicals in the church baptismal. The lights go out. A man attacks him. Lonnie is pushed headfirst into the church baptismal, breaks his neck and drowns. The police consider it an accident.

Hayden AJ 1: Hayden kills Lonnie.

Lonnie PJ 1: Lonnie is killed by Hayden.

DEEPER LAYER: Lonnie is a couple of years older than Hayden. He was in seminary school while Hayden was finishing high school. Lonnie’s younger brother killed himself when he became possessed. Lonnie persuaded Hayden’s friends to get out of a Satanic cult and turn to Jesus, but Hayden was already possessed. Hayden kills Lonnie because he felt Lonnie betrayed him.

SURPRISE/DISTRESS: Lonnie is killed, but it was made to look like an accident.

SETUP: Hayden, who is the serial killer, knows Lonnie from twenty years ago. Hayden has since carried a grudge. Revealed in the Climax.

SETUP: Lonnie becomes a ghost who helps Eppsa.

Eppsa PJ 1: Eppsa attends Lonnie’s funeral. She talks to Lonnie, but when he tells her he was murdered by a serial killer, she panics, realizes he’s a ghost, and runs off. Lonnie chases her. She crosses the street and looks back to see if he’s still following her. When he’s in the middle of the street, he’s about to be hit by an ice cream truck but disappears instead.

Lonnie PJ 2: Lonnie tells Eppsa he needs her help since she is the only one who can see him. He needs justice for the victims and himself so he can pass over. He doesn’t remember his attacker, but he knows the name of the next victim. When she flees, he chases her but vanishes as he is hit by an ice cream truck driven by Hayden.

SURPRISE/DISTRESS: Eppsa talks to a ghost. She is frightened when she discovers Lonnie is a ghost.

SETUP: Eppsa is ghost but doesn’t know it. Revealed in the Climax.

DEEPER LAYER: Lonnie knows that Eppsa is a ghost, but Eppsa doesn’t know she’s dead. He needs her since she can interact with the world.

REVEAL: Lonnie is a ghost.

Hayden AJ 2: Hayden and his 15-year-old son, Evren, drive with their music playing in the ice cream truck as they head to a neighborhood.

BONDING: Hayden and Evren are close. Evren looks up to his dad.

Eppsa PJ 2: Eppsa nervously talks to her neighbor for advice. The neighbor suggests talking to her clairvoyant friend, Clover.

SETUP: Eppsa’s neighbor is a ghost. Revealed in the Resolution.

INCITING INCIDENT: Eppsa talks to Clover and encounters an evil spirit.

Eppsa PJ 3: Eppsa is visiting a clairvoyant, Clover. She asks Clover to help her find Hayden. Eppsa is unaware that Clover only senses her presence as a ghost. Clover can’t locate Hayden just like in the prior sessions because he’s not dead. She senses an evil spirit in the room. Clover wants to know if Eppsa has seen any ghosts. Eppsa, embarrassed, lies and says no. Clover tells her to be cautious because an evil spirit is trying to attach itself to her. An evil spirit interrupts them by causing chaos. Both are afraid. Clover falls ill, and Eppsa leaves the store, unaware of the supernatural events about to unfold.

WOUND/HIDDEN WEAKNESS: Eppsa is afraid to talk to Clover about Lonnie. She loves her son, Hayden, and is desperate to find him.

APPREHENSION: The evil spirit scares them.

SETUP: The evil spirit is her dead husband. He appears multiple times and scares Eppsa. Revealed at Turning Point 3.

SETUP: Unless Eppsa talks to Clover or other ghosts, no one else can’t see or hear her. They can sense her and hear phone static.

Lonnie PJ 3: Lonnie scares Eppsa when he appears in her house. He tells her the name of the next victim before vanishing.

Eppsa PJ 4: Eppsa is terrified when Lonnie appears in her house. She thinks he’s the evil spirit trying to attach himself to her. Terrified, she begs him to leave. When he doesn’t leave, she throws things to scare him away.

TURNING POINT 1: Eppsa discovers the next victim’s name Lonnie gave her was real.

Eppsa PJ 5: In the obituary, Eppsa is shocked when she reads the name of the man Lonnie gave her.

DISBELIEF: She’s shocked to find Lonnie knew the name of the next victim.

ACT 2: Eppsa goes to the cemetery to talk to Lonnie. She’s given another victim’s name.

Eppsa PJ 6: Still wary and afraid, Eppsa, armed with things to ward off evil, goes to the cemetery for answers. She wants to know if he can see into the future or talk to humans because she wants to know about Hayden.

DISTRESS: She’s still afraid of Lonnie and doesn’t trust him.

Lonnie PJ 4: Lonnie laughs at Eppsa’s evil eye necklace, etc. and apologizes to her for scaring her. He doesn’t know anything about Hayden. He tells her the name of the next victim, but he doesn’t how the victims are connected. The serial killer is smart, tricky and vindictive.

SETUP: Hayden is the serial killer who is smart, tricky, vindictive, and possessed by a demon. Revealed in Climax.

Hayden AJ 3: Hayden watches the news and sees another death by someone trying to do a TikTok challenge. It’s becoming an epidemic.

Eppsa PJ 7: Eppsa reads the name of the victim Lonnie gave her. She calls the police. They have a bad connection, and they tell her to call back. She tries again. It’s staticky. They tell her to come in.

DEEPER LAYER REVEAL: The cop only hears static on the phone because she’s a ghost.

Eppsa PJ 8: Eppsa is at the police station waiting to talk to someone. The cop tells her to wait on a bench and to be patient. She checks her watch because she has a funeral to attend. A cop points in her direction and motions her over. She passes by Hayden who is in a chair.

COURAGE: Eppsa gets the strength to talk to the police.

Hayden AJ 4: Hayden is at the police station to receive an award for trying to save someone. His wife and son are proud of him. Hayden shivers when Eppsa’s spirit passes him. He asks if the news is real saying all the recent deaths are from TikTok challenges.

SETUP: Hayden can sense Eppsa’s spirit. Reveal in the Climax.

SURPRISE/WOUND: Hayden can sense his mom.

DEEPER LAYER REVEAL: Hayden is a good liar and manipulator. People love him. He killed the person but made it look like he was trying to save them. He feels the spirit of his mother when she passes him.

Eppsa PJ 9: From across the room, Eppsa hears a cop yell to Hayden for his good work. She turns from the cop that supposedly called her over and rushes after Hayden, but he and his family are out the door. She overhears cops standing at their car say these last few deaths were because they tried dangerous TikTok challenges.

EXCITEMENT: Eppsa is excited to finally see Hayden. She discovers her grandson.

Lonnie PJ 5: Lonnie appears outside the police station. He watches Eppsa run out. He goes and tells her there’s going to be another victim, but Eppsa tells him to leave her alone. She tries to do it quietly, so no one thinks she’s crazy talking to herself. She explains there’s no serial killer, just people dying from TikTok challenges. She’s late for a funeral and he needs to stop scaring her and pass over. She walks away before he says the next victim’s name. She wants nothing to do with him.

WOUND/DISTRESS: She doesn’t catch up with him.

Hayden AJ 5: Hayden volunteers at a homeless shelter. He passes out ice cream to everyone. He talks to an old high school friend who lives at the shelter. Hayden tells him they should get together next week.

BONDING: It seems like he’s bonding with an old classmate.

SETUP: Hayden volunteers to make him look good while finding victims. This friend is going to be another victim. Reveal in the Climax.

Lonnie PJ 6: Lonnie summons a bored little girl at a funeral to come over to him. He wants her to pass a message on to Eppsa. The next victim is a church member.

SETUP: The little girl might be a ghost, but I don’t know yet.

Eppsa PJ 10: Eppsa is late to a funeral. A little girl from the funeral comes up to her before she’s at the gravesite to tell Eppsa what Lonnie told her. (I don’t know if the little girl is alive and can see ghosts or if she is also a ghost.) Eppsa rushes into the church to find the address of the church member on the computer to check on them. Pastor Palmer McKee catches her in the office. She apologizes and leaves.

COURAGE/DISTRESS: Eppsa finds a way to help the possible next victim. She gets caught going through the church computer.

SETUP: Pastor Palmer McKee is a ghost. Revealed in the Resolution.

Hayden AJ 6: Hayden and Evren sell ice cream in a ritzy neighborhood. He plays classical music for the parents but jokes around with the kids, making him respectful yet fun to everyone.

BONDING: Hayden is loved by his patrons.

Eppsa PJ 11: Eppsa walks up to the front door and knocks. No answer. It’s locked. She goes around back. The door is unlocked. She goes inside and sees the woman dangling. The woman’s husband enters the front door, walks into the kitchen to find his dangling wife. Eppsa runs.

FEAR: Eppsa sees a woman who hung herself. Can she get away without being caught?

Hayden AJ 7: Hayden throws Evren an early birthday party before school starts. One of the kids’ parents was Hayden’s friend from school and will be another victim.

EXCITEMENT: Evren has a birthday party. The kids are jealous that he has such a great dad.

SETUP: Hayden’s friends is going to be one of his victims.

DEEPER LAYER REVEAL: Hayden discovers a dad of Evren’s friend was one of his high school friends who moved back to town.

TURNING POINT 2 / MIDPOINT: Eppsa talks to Clover. Eppsa thinks Lonnie is the evil spirit.

Eppsa PJ 12: Eppsa turns to Clover to see if she can help reveal the name of the serial killer. Clover can’t help her. She says an evil presence is in the room. Lonnie appears. Things fly. Eppsa tells Clover she’s being haunted by Lonnie’s evil spirit and to get rid of him. Clover’s face is scratched. She runs off.

FEAR: The evil spirit is aggressive.

Lonnie PJ 7: Lonnie talks to Eppsa when she is with Clover. Clover can’t hear him.

DEEPER LAYER REVEAL: The evil spirit is Eppsa’s dead husband, not Lonnie.

Hayden AJ 8: Hayden and Evren serve ice cream at the soup kitchen.

COMPASSION: Hayden seems to care about people.

SETUP: Hayden’s searching for his next victim.

Eppsa PJ 13: When Eppsa’s neighbor walks over, Eppsa hears a crash outside her house. She rushes to see. She sees the ghost of a young woman walking away from the accident. The young woman looks at Eppsa and signals her over. Eppsa is afraid. The young woman disappears. Eppsa freaks out and slams her door after her neighbor enters. An evil spirit comes after them. The neighbor flees. Eppsa hides. She hears a crash upstairs. She goes upstairs and finds a picture on the floor and an amulet hanging on the wall in Hayden’s old room.

FEAR: Eppsa sees another ghost.

DEEPER LAYER REVEAL: The ghost who is haunting Eppsa, which is her ghostly husband, wants her to find the amulet.

Lonnie PJ 8: Lonnie talks to a victim who wants to pass over but can’t. There might be several people that can’t pass over.

Hayden AJ 9: Driving in a poorly lit neighborhood in his ice cream truck, Hayden creeps along as he follows a man in a dark hoodie. The guy seems nervous and acts weird. Hayden follows him around another corner. The man starts to run. Hayden calls out. It’s his old friend with whom he got reacquainted with at Evren’s party. Hayden gives him a ride home.

FEAR/COMPASSION: We fear for the man because it seems like Hayden is stalking him. Hayden gives his friend a ride.

ACT 3: Eppsa discovers Hayden was friends with all the victims and fears he is on the list. Lonnie helps Eppsa realize she’s a ghost.

Eppsa PJ 14: Eppsa has a nightmare about her husband killing Hayden and himself. She tells her neighbor about the recurring nightmare.

FEAR: Eppsa thinks her husband killed Hayden and then himself.

RELIEF: It was just a nightmare.

Hayden AJ 10: Hayden is attacked or mugged by someone. He’s outside the soup kitchen or homeless shelter when it happens. He goes to the hospital.

FEAR: Hayden is attacked by someone.

SETUP: This is to throw everyone off that Hayden is the killer. Reveal is in the 3^rd Act or Climax? It might be a homeless person, a real killer, or one of his later victims.

Eppsa PJ 15: Eppsa meets with Clover to get rid of Lonnie. Lonnie materializes during the session. An evil entity causes havoc. Clover says it’s not Lonnie, but a different and sinister spirit.

EMOTIONAL DILEMMA: Eppsa wants Clover to get rid of Lonnie although she likes him.

FEAR/RELIEF: Lonnie isn’t evil.

Lonnie PJ 9: Clover senses Lonnie and realizes he’s a good spirit who just has unfinished business. Eppsa needs to listen to him. Lonnie gives her the name of the next victim.

Hayden AJ 10: Hayden is at a bar with his homeless friend. They walk out of a bar and stop in a park. Hayden tells his friend that when Evren goes back to school, his friend could help sell ice cream for cash to get off the street. The friend says he’s had a rough life after they joined the cult. He never truly believed in Jesus and doesn’t believe in Satan. Hayden assures him Satan is real; just look at the world we live in.

BONDING: Hayden talks to his old friend.

Eppsa PJ 16: Eppsa encounters Hayden on the street when he’s drunk and hanging out with his homeless friend. Hayden sees Eppsa’s ghostly form. He yells at her thinking she’s a real woman who resembles his mom. He’s angry that his mom was weak and wasn’t there for him. She was the reason the family was torn apart. He passes out on the bench. Eppsa cries.

DISTRESS/EMOTIONAL DILEMMA: Hayden is mean to Eppsa and Eppsa sees he’s hurting and wants to help.

REVEAL: Deep down, Hayden is hurt by the loss of his parents.

Eppsa PJ 17: Eppsa sees the obituary with the face of the homeless man who was with Hayden the day before. He has a tattoo that resembles the amulet. She looks through Hayden’s yearbook. The homeless man went to his high school. Eppsa is touched that there is a picture of a girl with a heart around her. An evil spirit creeps through her house. It closes a door. She thinks it’s Lonnie.

FEAR: Eppsa sees and/or hears things.

Lonnie PJ 10: Lonnie manifests at her house, scaring her. He sees the amulet. He’s never seen anything like it. Eppsa tells him it’s an amulet Hayden had for protection and it’s also a tattoo on one of the victims.

RELIEF: She thinks it was just Lonnie.

Eppsa PJ 18: Eppsa attends the funeral of the woman she saw hanging. She realizes it’s the woman in Hayden’s yearbook with a heart around her picture. Eppsa apologizes to Lonnie.

BONDING: She likes Lonnie and wants to help him.

Lonnie PJ 11: Lonnie and Eppsa talk after the funeral. She thinks there’s a link with Hayden’s high school friends. She believes the killer is after kids that attended Hayden’s school. She wants to find the killer to protect Hayden.

DISTRESS: She fears Hayden is going to be a victim.

REVEAL: The people killed were high school friends.

DEEPER LAYER REVEAL: Eppsa feels Hayden’s life is in danger by the serial killer.

Hayden AJ 11: Hayden receives a key to the town. His wife, Neta, and Evren are proud of him, too.

SUCCESS: Hayden is loved and gets awards.

Eppsa PJ 19: Eppsa talks to Clover trying to get answers and find Hayden before he becomes a victim of the serial killer. She also wants to speak to her dead husband, thinking he might be able to help her find Hayden since they were close. An evil spirit interrupts and shatters her crystal ball.

FEAR: The evil spirit torments Eppsa.

Lonnie PJ 12: Lonnie is inside Eppsa’s house. He snoops through her stuff. He does something that makes Eppsa question his honesty or something.

Hayden AJ 12: Hayden kills someone in the back of the ice cream truck, while Evren is in front. Hayden shows Evren a gun and says he was protecting himself. He doesn’t want to tarnish his reputation, so they can’t tell anyone.

FEAR: We think Hayden is going to get killed, but he kills someone instead.

REVEAL: Hayden is truly demonic and will kill anyone without remorse.

DEEPER LAYER REVEAL: Hayden is grooming Evren.

Eppsa PJ 20: She finds a Satanic book hidden in the wall of her bedroom closet behind her husband’s clothes which are still in there.

SHOCK: Eppsa can’t believe her husband was a Satanist.

SETUP: Eppsa’s husband was a Satanist. Revealed in Climax.

Hayden AJ 13: Hayden encounters a malevolent, ghostly presence at his house. It does something that reminds him of his dad.

FEAR: Hayden is afraid of the ghost.

TURNING POINT 3: Eppsa is despondent and realizes the people dying all had been part of a Satanic cult. She now believes her husband is the ghost killing everyone.

Eppsa PJ 21: Eppsa goes to church to pray. She sees a woman crying while praying. The woman takes her to her grandson’s gravesite. It is the name of the teenager who killed himself after joining the Satanic cult. She wonders if Hayden was a part of the cult.

BONDING/DISTRESS: Eppsa sympathizes with the grandmother. She is now putting the pieces together. She’s worried about Hayden.

SETUP: The grandson killed himself after joining the cult with Hayden.

DEEPER LAYER REVEAL: The grandmother is a stuck spirit who is waiting for justice.

Lonnie AJ 13: Lonnie tells Eppsa to look to see if Hayden’s phone number is in the church registry.

Eppsa PJ 22: Eppsa attends the funeral of the homeless man. She goes into the church and finds Hayden’s number. She talks to the Pastor Palmer McKee. She wants him to pray for Hayden’s safety.

Hayden AJ 14: Hayden and Evren make their rounds in the ice cream truck. They are parked across the street from the church where Eppsa sees them.

Eppsa PJ 23: Eppsa calls and runs after Hayden and Evren, but she can’t catch up.

DISTRESS: Eppsa is eager to talk to Hayden to warn him about the danger.

Lonnie PJ 14: Lonnie finally talks to Clover because he’s worried about Eppsa.

BONDING: Lonnie wants to help Eppsa.

Hayden AJ 15: Hayden and his family are celebrating something around a bonfire with a group of people. Hayden escorts Evren along with the other men into the woods. Evren comes out wearing an amulet. He proudly shows it off to his mom.

BONDING/EXCITEMENT: Hayden and Evren are close. It seems like Hayden is giving Evren an amulet to protect him.

SETUP: Hayden introduces Evren to his Satanic cult, although the audience will think the amulet is for protection. Reveal in Resolution.

Eppsa PJ 24: Eppsa texts Hayden. He says it can’t be her because she’s gone and ruined their family. She’s been dead to him a long time. He won’t respond to her texts. She cries. An evil spirit reveals himself as her husband. He’s angry, chases her, and knocks things over. She hides and falls asleep in the closet.

FEAR: Eppsa is chased and tormented by the evil spirit, again.

REVEAL: Eppsa is dead. The audience still might think it’s metaphorical.

ACT 4: Eppsa learns she’s a ghost and was murdered by her husband. She forces Hayden to kill himself.

Eppsa PJ 25: Eppsa is so anxious about Hayden’s safety, that she materializes in front of him at his house to tell him the ghost of his dad is killing people.

LOVE: Eppsa loves her son and will do anything for him.

Hayden AJ 16: Hayden is doing something to the ice cream truck as a surprise for Evren’s birthday in a few days. Hayden sees his mom appear. He gets angry. He throws something at her. It goes through her. A demon steps out of Hayden. The demon morphs into her husband. He threatens to take her to Hell where she belongs. The demon says Hayden had to kill the people because they betrayed Satan. She’s confused and afraid. She says something about their old house. She disappears. The demon reenters Hayden. His eyes turn black and then returns to normal. Hayden thinks she’s gone for good.

LOVE/BONDING/FEAR/EMOTIONAL DILEMMA: Eppsa expresses her love for her son. Hayden is possessed by a demon. Eppsa disappears in fear of what might happen to her.

REVEAL: Hayden is the serial killer possessed by a demon.

REVEAL: Eppsa’s husband was a Satanist.

Eppsa PJ 26: Eppsa is at the cemetery with Lonnie.

Lonnie PJ 15: Lonnie takes Eppsa to her gravesite and shows her the headstone where she and her husband are buried. She realizes the nightmares were real, but she was killed and not Hayden. They both vanish.

WOUND: Eppsa couldn’t face the fact that her husband killed her.

REVEAL: Eppsa discovers she’s a ghost just like Lonnie.

Hayden AJ 17: Hayden goes to his old house. The house is now dilapidated. He enters and looks around. He goes to his old room. The picture is on the floor and the amulet is missing from the wall.

WOUND: Hayden is sad and ??? returning to his old house.

REVEAL: The house was always dilapidated, but Eppsa didn’t see it. Some of the things that scared her was from the house falling down.

Eppsa PJ 27: Eppsa appears and scares Hayden. She takes a step closer to him. Her spectral form seemingly unaffected by the physical barriers.

FEAR/EMOTIONAL DILEMMA: Eppsa is angry and worried about Hayden and the demon inside him.

Hayden AJ 18: To manipulate Eppsa, Hayden talks to her like he’s a kid again and begs for forgiveness. She says he can’t kill people and get away with it. He says he can do whatever he wants.

BETRAYAL: Hayden betrays Eppsa.

REVEAL: She asks Hayden about Lonnie, and he tells her what happened when they were younger.

He sees the amulet that he came back to get. He grabs for it. Eppsa knocks it to the floor. He says it’s his amulet that was sanctified with his friend’s sacrificial blood. He reaches for it. She creates an unseen force around the amulet; it glows and shatters. It was to bond to his evil spirit that leaves his body. Eppsa’s energy builds as she holds him in place. The floorboard safe opens. A gun emerges. Her supernatural power overrides Hayden’s resistance. His hand involuntarily takes ahold of the gun. She seems to draw energy from his fear and vulnerability and makes him shoot himself for justice. A bigger and more malevolent, red-eyed spirit escapes Hayden, swooshes through the house, and vanishes.

FEAR/MORAL ISSUE/EMOTIONAL DILEMMA: Eppsa must choose to stop Hayden by making him kill himself or let him continue to kill people and not get justice for his victims.

REVEAL: The amulet was evil.

Resolution: Eppsa, Lonnie, and the other spirits pass over finding peace. Evren gets keys to the ice cream truck on his 16^th birthday. His fiddles with the amulet around his neck that he got with his dad at the picnic. His eye’s turn black and return to normal.

LOVE: Everyone has closer and passes over.

FEAR: Evren is now possessed by the demon.

REVEAL: All the victims, who couldn’t let go, have closer and pass over.

[Adrienne Watkins]

Adrienne Watkins Emotional Moments Module 4 Lesson 7

My Vision: I am going to work as hard as I reasonably am able to succeed at script writing to be recognized by multiple movie producers as a skilled script writer, and to have my scripts produced worldwide.

What I have learned from this assignment is that it’s important to engage the audience by having emotional moments in the script.

Act 1 Surprise -Roy & Fransie 1^st encounter, Roy spills coffee on Fransie tee shirt when crossing the street, she walks away and rolls her eyes.

Emotional Dilemma: Roy is embarrassed and tries to apologies.

Act 2: Hidden Weakness: Roy is attracted to Fransie when he sees her dancing in a music store but refuses to accept his feelings. Ask his assistance Flavia to hire her as one of his dances.

Excitement: Fransie needs the money, she accepts working with a famous jazz musician

Act 3: Mutual Wounds: Roy is divorced and still hurt by it, refuses to allow his feelings for Fransie to show. Fransie ignores her feelings for Roy.

Hidden Insecurity: Flavis gets Roy to agree to a world concert tour, she is afraid Roy will never notice how much she cares for him as long as Fransie is around.

Act4: Distress: Flavia has sabotaged Roy and Fransie relationship. She tells Fransie Roy felt sorry for her and that is why he asks her to dance with him. Flavia tells Roy that Fransie is not able to travel with them because she’ is mentally unstable and on medication.

Breakthrough: Flavia’s parents are also deceased but find a letter from her parents explain that she too was adopted and that she has a sister. Enclosed in the letter is her sister’s birth certificate, she discovers its Fransie.

Win/Love: Flavia has Fransie flown into town to perform with Roy and reveals they are sisters. They both break down and cry. Flavis tells Roy she lied on Fransie and convinces him to propose to Fransie.

[Marguerite Langstaff]

Module 5 Lesson 7

Marguerite Langstaff: THE BILLIONAIRE IN 501

Vision: I want to learn to write and market movie scripts.

What I learned: I learned that my outline is too short and that seems to truly weaken my script. As the song says, I shall overcome!”

State/activity: I’m completely capable of writing Act 2.

How is it going? It’s going great in one respect and pretty slowly in another. I find that Hal’s caution not to worry is a great motivator and am taking him at his word. I also have a strange reaction to the four scripts I’ve already written. This motivates me to go to them and do some more drafts!

[Bent Hanlen]

BENT’S EMOTIONAL MOMENTS

MY VISION IS TO WORK AS A SCRIPTWRITER! AND BE PAID.

WHAT I LEARNED DOING THIS ASSIGNMENT IS THIS….. MY STORY IS UPPED SEVERAL LEVELS BECAUSE I SEE THE IMPORTANCE OF EMOTIONAL POWER. THIS MEANS I HAVE TO LET SOME CHARACTERS DIE. OOF.

Positive Emotions

• Surprise
• Bonding
• Excitement
• Courage
• Success/Winning
• Love

Negative Emotions

• Wounds
• Emotional Dilemma
• Betrayal
• Moral issue
• Hidden weakness
• Distress
• Sacrifice

ACT ONE

SANTA AND THE GENERAL ARGUE OVER INCREASING OIL DRILLING AND OUTPUT.

BETRAYAL – EARLIER A RUSSIAN SUB LEFT A DOCK AT SANTA’S VILLAGE.

LOVE – INDIGO SEARCHES THE SLEIGHS FOR HAZELA BECAUSE SHE IS TOO YOUNG TO GO OUT ON THE DELIVIERIES.

ACT TWO

SURPRISE – INDIGO SEES THE SKYLINE OF A HUGE CITY AND HOW BEAUTIFUL IT IS.

BONDING – INDIGO MEETS AN AWAKE CHILD AND THEY LEARN A LITTLE ABOUT EACH OTHER AND FIND SIMILARITIES.

ACT THREE

MORAL ISSUE – THE GENERAL REFUSES TO SEARCH FOR HAZELA WHO WAS CAPTURED BY KRAMPUS. HE FEELS SHE IS AS GOOD AS DEAD AT THIS POINT.

SUCCESS/WINNING – THE BAG OF CHILDREN ARE SAVED AND GIVEN TO A POLICE CAR. INDIGO SAYS GOODBYE TO HIS NEW FRIEND.

ACT FOUR

EMOTIONAL DILEMMA – KRAMPUS IS CLOSE TO DEFEATING SANTA. INDIGO SEES HIS SISTER IS SAFE SO HE DECIDES TO OVERCOME HIS FEARS AND GOES TO SAVE SANTA.

COURAGE – INDIGO FINDS IT IN HIMSELF TO SAVE SANTA FROM FALLING INTO THE OCEAN IN A SLEIGH THAT HAS LOST POWER.

BETRAYAL – THE GENERAL MADE A SECRET DEAL WITH RUSSIA AND CANADA TO ALLOW MORE DRILLING WITHOUT SANTA’S CONSENT.

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