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Lesson 7
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ASSIGNMENT 7
Subject line: Pat’s High Speed Beat Sheet
What I learned doing this assignment is new ways to keep the writing process flowing.
Listen to the Empowerment Audio.
https://30dayscript.s3.amazonaws.com/Empowerment+Audio.m4a
2. Decide to intentionally use the High Speed Writing Rules throughout the rest of this program.
Rule 1: Understand writing in
drafts.
Rule 2: Choose speed over quality
for EARLY drafts.
Rule 3: Allow yourself to start
(and continue) without all the answers.
Rule 4: Use empowering self talk.
Cheer yourself on.
Rule 5: Give yourself freedom to
write without criticism.
Rule 6: Keep moving. Don’t allow
yourself to ever stall out.
Rule 7: if it doesn’t come to
you, give it to your creative mind to process.3. Use the High Speed Writing Rules as you create your Beat Sheet.
Pass 1: Organize your Structure
and Transformational Events.
Pass 2: Add slug lines.
Pass 3: Add placeholders and
additional scenes.BEAT SHEET
INT. HANK’S HOUSE – DAY
OPENING
HANK invites his mom, CARROT TOP, over for a pity party. His wife has moved out.
EXT. MAILBOX – DAY
INCITING INCIDENT
Hank opens the mailbox, it’s from an attorney. He opens the letter to discover that it’s divorce paper
T1. Losing the only wife he ever loved.
INT. HANK’S HOUSE – DAY
Hank calls his mom to come over. She does and tells him he needs to pull out his marriage counselor’s license and use it to get her back.
T2. Thinks that involving himself in the marriage business will help him learn but he fails at first.
INT. HANK’S HOUSE/OFFICE – DAY
Hank finds the diploma, but it’s expired.
Hank calls the school to find out how to reinstate the license.
He learns he’ll have to go back to school to have it reinstated.
ACT II
NEW PLAN
Hank’s mom convinces him it’s the thing to do.
It will help get his wife back.
INT. CAR – DAY
Carrot top convinces Hank to go ahead and open his marriage business without the license.
PLACEHOLDER:
Hanks many trials with working with people at the school.
T3. Makes sarcastic comments to other potential friends who he alienates.
INT. HANK’S BUSINESS OFFICE – DAY
City officials soon learn he’s operating without a license.
MIDDLE
The business is closed.
INT. ELAINE’S HOUSE – DAY
Elaine invites Hank for a talk at a Bistro.
PLOT POINT 2.
INT. BAR – NIGHT
Hank talks with Terri from school She realizes he’s been hurt.
T4. After Hank talks with Terri he realizes that other people have feelings too.
Elaine catches Hank at a bar with another woman, TERRI, a fellow student.
When Elaine doesn’t show he calls her, and a man answers.
T5. Gains confidence through Terri that can see through his facade.
ACT 4
PLACE HOLDER
They are both mad at each other.
INT. ELAINE’S HOME – DAY
Terri, the fellow student, calls on Elaine to tell her she has no claims on Hank.
INT. HANK’S HOUSE/ELAINE’S HOUSE – DAY
Elaine and Hank talk on the phone. He wants to know who the man is that answered the phone.
Elaine explains that her sink was overflowing, and she had called the Maintenance man.
T6. His wife recognizes he’s changing.
T7. Gaining even more confidence, he vows not to use sarcasm to hurt others.
PLACE HOLDER
Hank’s graduation from Marriage School.
INT. HANK’S HOUSE – DAY
Hank’s license shows up in the mail after waiting several days.
T8. Knows he can show love and not be afraid of losing.
Elaine moves back into the house.
4. When you post this assignment, make a commitment to the group that you are going to use these High-Speed Writing Rules to get your script done at record speed.
I commit to the group; I will use high speed rules to
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George Tedino
Beat Sheet
What I learned doing this assignment
a bit of a different perspective of looking at structures
I understand the rules
Acts and transformation events
Act 1
EXT. BUILDING – NIGHT
Tall building on the waterfront as a man named GEORGE leaps out of a window.
EXT. HIGH SCHOOL – DAY
A high school with lockers outside, many kids walking around. George is standing at his locker talking to a girl in his class when her boyfriend a football player and bully ADAM comes over to stop George from talking to her.
EXT. SURBAN STREET – DAY
George walking home with Kimmie and John when a car driven by Adam with a few of his teammates stop and go to harass George but more something is about to go down.
Act 2
INT. SCHOOL CLASSROOM
George in a classroom with a MONK teacher. There is a bunch of stuff written on the board as George is sitting cross criss applesauce on the floor with his eyes closed looking like he is mediating.
EXT. STARBUCKS – DAY
George reunites with John and Kimmie, they are exchanging hugs as they are about to sit down.
INT. COLLEGE CLASSROOM
George is sitting down when a young woman named SARA walks to his row and she trips and falls into him. They share a smile and a laugh.
Act 3
EXT. OUTSIDE RESTURANT – NIGHT
Two thugs run up on George and Sara to try and rob them.
INT. GRANDPARENTS HOUSE
George is surrounded by Marty and his forces, Marty is trying to negotiating with George to join him and stop running.
INT. GEORGE”S BEDROOM
George is sitting tied up to a chair bleeding when he looks over and sees Sara on the bed tied down crying and screaming gagged. He is concerned and tries to move but is met with a punch, she screams more and is slapped. George screams.
Act 4
INT. CHAMBER ROOM
George getting out of his chamber and John is there. George begins to get dressed as they discuss what the plan is
EXT. LARGE BUILDING – NIGHT
George and John start to go toward the building Marty Kimmie and forces are inside waiting for them.
EXT. MARTY’S OFFICE
George finally makes it to the office, he is tired but ready for his face off. Kimmie is in there as well. Confrontation begins.
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Lesson 7- Beat Sheet and High-Speed Writing
WHAT DID I GET OUT OF THIS ASSIGNMENT? I understand there is another way to approach script writing. I also see that this can create a much clearer approach to refinement without the painful criticism, judgment, and self-doubt that stops me in my tracks.
Act 1
INT. HOTEL KITCHEN – EARLY MORNING
Opening: We travel through the bowels of a luxury hotel, passing workers and departments that keep the hotel running. As we come through a hotel room, we see a maid changing the sheets in a suite.
EXT. DARI’S FRONT DOOR – MIDNIGHT
Cops at her door tell her husband has been shot in a drive-by. Her mother comforts her.
Daria’s husband is shot
EXT. SCHOOL FIELD – DAY TIME
Her son dies unexpectedly
INT. MONROES HOTEL SUITE – EVENING
She meets Senator or Congressman Monroe
<b style=”background-color: transparent; font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Act 2
PLACE HOLDER
Stephane sees something strong and charismatic in Daria. She sees the buried leader within.
Daria Meets Stephanie
INT. DARI’S LIVINGROOM – EVENING
Daris starts to study
Act 3
INT. COFFEESHOP – MORNING
Stephanie introduces Daria to a lobbyist and follow activist.
Daria decides to run against Monroe
Act 4
INT. DARIA’S KITCHEN – AFTERNOON
Daria receives a phone call from a young man telling her that Monroe is hiding something. That if she goes to an address, she will discover his secret.
Daria discovers Monroe’s secret.
She realizes that dark money has flowed into her campaign
EXT. STEPS OF THE STATE CAPITOL – MORNING
Minutes before Daria steps on stage, she is told by her campaign manager that there has big a massive inflow of Dark Money into her campaign.
She must choose between winning and revealing the truth about the money and Monroe.
EXT.CAMPAIGN HEADQUARTERS – LATE NIGHT
The last scene is election night, with the final results coming in. We hear the cheers as the number goes up for Daria, the screen goes black before the final result.
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LESSON 7 KIM REED’S HIGH SPEED BEAT SHEET
THE DESERT SONG OF ANA VICTORIA BY KIM REED
WHAT I LEARNED FROM THIS ASSIGNMENT IS HOW TO LOOK AT THE UNDERLYING STRUCTURE AND HOW VISUAL SCENES NEED TO BE PLANNED TO MAINTAIN CONTINUITY WITH THE STORY.
Act 1: 30 pages
Opening:
EXT. DESERT – NIGHT
A still figure lying in the desert. An animal comes close to the figure. Ana Victoria is singing low or making noise trying to sing. A sharp sound scares it away.
A woman is remembering what happened and dreaming.
INT. TRUCK OR SUV – NIGHT
TE 1
AV is in a truck speeding through the desert. Sounds of the desert and the air rushing by in the night. In the front seat two men on either side of our heroine Ana Victoria. The men are joking with her that she would be happy in a place where they have fun. At first visual the audience cannot tell that she is not a friend or familiar to them, but a woman being driven across the border by traffickers. The driver says they are in the United States now. Near where the church group leaves water she asks. Yes, he confirms, but we are not stopping there tonight. The two men start to molest AV. The two children are asleep in the back of the truck, drugged with a mild sedative. AV objects and starts to fight them. This was not the deal her husband agreed to. But he is dead and she has no money to pay for this trip across the border. One man tells her that they have a buyer for her little girl and some interest in her little boy, so that will repay the debt she and her husband owed them. One tells her she is not a virgin, so she should get some practice. They want to recommend her for a nice brothel outside of Chicago. AV’s resistance escalates. It becomes difficult to drive. She kicks the man in the passenger seat and he opens the door to the truck, it swings open but the driver does not stop. AV is trying to kick him out of the open door or cause the driver to stop. The men start to punch her to control her violent response. She hits back. In frustration the man in the passenger side grabs her and flings her from the truck. The truck slows down but does not stop. The lights recede into the night. AV is knocked out laying near the truck tracks.
EXT. DESERT – NIGHT
A woman is dreaming. She imagines her children. Her husband, Alejandro their father, loved them. He loved her. In her dream she sees her family. She sings to them. They are happy. Then something jumps in the darkness.
INT. A ROOM IN THE SOUTH – DAY – FLASHBACK
Her memory shifts to a crisis. Her husband Alejandro says they must leave. Their lives are in danger. His life is in danger here. The decision to leave home and head for the United States was not easy. The local gang controlled the southwest city where they lived, where Al, a local police officer, became a political thorn in their side trying to organize people to reject and resist them. His captain is dead. There is no way to defend the station. It is hopeless. The husband used contacts online to find a trip north. They will have to get on a train heading to the borderland where they will get off in Nogales. There are men there who can make the crossing to the United States easier, with a military vehicle that can withstand the desert.
EXT. RAILROAD TRACKS AND OPEN CAR – DAY
TE 2
Flash to La Bestia, a train called the Beast, where the family is squeezed into a small space in a crowded car. The train is full of foreigners from south of the Mexican border. No one will follow them on this route or imagine they are among so many desperate people going north. Sounds of horror, of women crying because they are being raped by men on the train. Her husband stands watch over his family. The children are afraid, but they sleep next to their mother.
INT. GUEST HOUSE – DAY
TE 3
In Nogales, they find a guest house that will rent a room to them until they can cross. Alejandro goes out to find information. He returns and tells AV he wants to go and see the border which is about 40 miles from their location. He will hitch a ride with a local, then walk the last 10 miles at night. Maybe they can save money and cross on foot. AV should stay in the guest house until he returns.
INT. GUEST HOUSE – MORNING
TE 4
EXT. GUEST HOUSE YARD – MORNING
Inciting Incident: In the morning there is some commotion outside. The guest house owner tells AV that her husband was found dead in the desert. She places her hands over the heart. They are willing to bury her husband on credit, but this will increase her debt. Alejandro made contacts who know the guest house. They know she is waiting for them. But she does not know who anyone is.
Optional: AV identifies her husband Alejandro- or the local officer hands her his backpack that has his id.
TE 5
EXT. FRONT OF GUEST HOUSE – AFTERNOON
Turning Point: The guest house owner tells AV that their things are out front. Men are coming to take them across the desert to the United States. AV and the children carry backpacks. A truck pulls up. A man gets out. He approaches AV and the children. He has a bottle with water in it. He tells her that the children should drink something before they start the trip. It will help them sleep and deal with the trip. She realizes he is insisting that she give them some of the bottle. To help them sleep, yes? Yes, he tells her. They carry the children to the truck. The man orders AV to ride up front with he and the driver.
EXT. DESERT – MORNING
Morning in the desert. Someone is pouring water from a plastic bottle on AV’s face. There are three people speaking English. This is the United States, one says. We don’t want you to die here. The group helps get AV into their vehicle. She mumbles that she needs to find her children. The group look at one another. There is no one within miles because they have done a circuit looking for migrants. One points out the deep tire tracks. A powerful SUV went through here. AV mumbles, they took my children. God protect them, a member of the group says. Another says quietly, we can’t catch them and if the patrol gets to them first, they will go into child protective services and get a temporary adoption. AV passes out.
Act 2:
INT. CHURCH – DAY
AV is cleaning a church in Arizona. She is working as a domestic and she volunteers to help the church where she was rescued. (She is doing penance over losing her children.) She meets an older man who is praying, Manuel Guerrero. His wife died two years ago. He is retired from the sheriff’s department. He asks AV if he can help her move the furniture. She tells him her husband was also a police officer. He died on the trip to the US. They have coffee. Manny discovers that AV lost her children who were taken north to Chicago by traffickers. She tells him their story. She wants to go north and search for them. Nothing else is as important as seeing her children again. He is interested in AV and helping her. He feels protective toward AV and he wants her to find him interesting. He tells her he can make some calls and see if there are any records of her children being taken into the system.
TE 1
INT. HOUSE – NOON
After Church on Sunday AV accepts his invitation to come over for something to eat. He puts a map on the table and talks to her about Chicago, how far it is by train or highway, where Mexicans live in La Villeta and Pilsen. He offers to take her north where they can ask people in the Mexican communities if they know how to find her children.
AV is impressed with how Manuel cares for her by helping her, listening to her. She knows they both need love. They begin a passionate affair. The search is something they can work on together. It revives his sense of purpose and mission. Manny grows stronger loving again.
INT. CHURCH – AFTERNOON LATER IN TIME
TE 2
AV marries Manuel.
EXT. CHICAGO STREETS – DAY
Plan in action: AV and Manuel make trips to search for the children. They get some information about where the gangs who control the desert around Nogales have sold under-age migrants as laborers in the Chicago area.
INT. CHICAGO ORGANIZATION – DAY
TE 3
AV finds contacts in organizations that help immigrants reunite their families. They involve her in conversations about strategy and put out messages online with information about her search. There are people and places that are new, where all share the label of immigrant. The people they meet encourage her. She feels real hope, but there are thousands of people who lost their relatives on the trip north, generations of people who have a connection to this experience and understand loss. AV meets people with stories about the immigrant experience.
INT. HOTEL ROOM – EVENING
Midpoint Turning Point: Despite the frustration of not finding her son and daughter, AV vows to go on. Manny convinces her to rest back home with him so that she can keep up her strength and think through their next moves in the search.
INT. HOME IN AZ – DAY
Back home, she keeps in touch with the immigrant organizations, helping when she can. One day a woman calls to tell her that she thinks she knows where the traffickers left her children. AV goes out into the desert and prays. There is hope.
Act 3:
EXT. CHICAGO – DAYS
AV and Manny explore dead ends, one or two dangerous situations, but do not find Gael.
INTS. – DAYS
AV goes to work for a temp agency. She sees how exploited people are in the city.
INT. CHURCH – DAY
TE 1
Someone from a church organization thinks they may know her daughter’s stepparents, a couple that applied to adopt and were rejected because of their age and some hostility toward new immigrants. Eventually, AV finds Carmina, who was adopted by an older business couple in Chicago.
EXT. CHICAGO STREETS – DAYS
TE 2
Rethink everything. Carmina wanted to find her real mother. She wants to join her mother’s search for her brother. They start searching together.
INT. HOME IN CHICAGO – DAY
New plan: Carmina enlists her stepparents who reveal how they found her.
EXT. LA VILLETA STREETS – DAY
Carmina uses the information to follow leads to organized criminals who do business in the immigrant enclaves of the city and travel to the borderland where their connections bring in people and illegal products.
INT./EXT. CHICAGO DAYS
TE 3
Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift: People in the community tell AV that she is attracting the attention of the FBI and authorities, bringing too much attention to them by hostile officers. There are many people who are not related to her search who need to hide their origins or their taxes or many things that the authorities could use to hurt their families.
EXT./INT. CHICAGO STREETS AND STOREFRONTS – DAYS
AV persists in harassing some gang members. AV and her daughter are almost hit by gunfire from some unseen shooter. AV discovers her connections are telling her to go home now. This will get worse. One or two swear they will keep their eyes open for her.
INT. CHICAGO HOUSE – DAY
Carmina decides to stay with her stepparents instead of moving to Arizona to rejoin her mother, but the two form a real relationship that is not going away.
INT. AMTRAK TRAIN – DAY
With half of her search completed, AV returns to Arizona with mixed feelings. In part, she cannot abandon the search for Gael because that would be abandoning part of herself, her baby.
ACT 4:
INT. CHICAGO ORGANIZATION OR CHURCH – DAY
TE 1
Carmina meets a woman who knows the gang members. She tells her that there was a young boy who the gang leader adopted in his own family because the child was so attractive, a real devil doll. AV gets a call from a police officer who she met in Pilsen.
INT. POLICE STATION – MORNING
TE 2
The police believe Gael is being raised by a man associated with a burglary and car theft ring that helps move drugs for a cartel. The leader of this group has a history of being seen with older boys who are identified as his children who then disappear. They tell AV that Gael may be dead. AV must go and find out if Gael is still alive.
EXT. STREETSCAPE IN CHICAGO – DAY
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
TE 3
AV runs past a series of places she saw before, looking for the place the police describe. She arrives at a lot where several cars are lined up as if they are going to be shipped somewhere. She waits patiently out of sight behind a grass mound or wall. A car mover truck arrives. A man gets out of the cab. He moves to the line of autos. He starts one to place on the carrier. AV sneaks closer to the cab of his truck. A young boy jumps out of the truck cab and moves toward the place where AV is watching. Gael meets AV. It is a surprise. He does not yell. She asks if he knows who she is? Yes, he remembers that she is his mother. He does not yell. He greets her as mother. But he does not attempt to hug her or approach her. He tells her that he loves his family here. He was told that she abandoned them in the desert on the way north. That she made a deal to give up her children to pay off debt. His adoptive father is a successful man. His father is dead. Did she make that deal or not? Gael knows that she did, even if she did not understand what it would mean. It was AV’s fault that she lost her family in the desert. She is harassing him and his family. She has to stop asking for information or she may be hurt. No one wants to disrupt their relationships. Gael is beautiful, healthy, but menacing, groomed to do more evil as he grows older. Crushed, AV watches as Gael returns to the truck and jumps into the cab. The driver is finished loading. He jumps in and the truck leaves the lot. Dust and emptiness confront AV now.
INT. CHICAGO HOUSE – EVENING
AV considers killing his new family to fulfill her revenge, but her daughter’s love stops her from going on a suicide mission.
Resolution
TE 4
EXT. EMPTY LOT – DAY
AV enlists the police in a major bust of the gang member who has Gael. Gael hates AV and will not surrender to the police. Gael escapes with another gang member.
AV accepts that Gael and Carmina have their own paths. She found them again. Her vendetta would never make up for what people experienced while trying to survive at the mercy of traffickers and exploiters.
EXT. DESERT – AZ SUNSET
AV is watching the desert as shadows deepen. A woman is singing the love song that AV sang to her family and on the night of their separation. The music grows louder.
AV is joined by her husband Manny who tenderly puts his arm around her shoulders.
What is love? The desert in her heart may never entirely close. Perhaps they all died on that trip north and were revived, reborn in a new day where there was more hope.
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This reply was modified 1 year, 9 months ago by Kimberly Reed.
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Tasha’s High Speed Beat Sheet
Doing this assignment, I learned: that I want to accept the rules of the High Speed Writing process, but the rule that proves hardest to follow is Rule 5. I must be actively diligent about keeping criticism and self-doubt at bay.
I confirm I listened to the Empowerment Audio.
I confirm that I’ve decided to intentionally use the High Speed Writing process throughout the rest of this program.
Pass 1: Organize your Structure and Transformational Events.
Pass 2: Add slug lines.
Pass 3: Add placeholders and additional scenes
Act 1:
Opening:
INT. BETHANY’S CHILDHOOD BEDROOM – DAY
TE 1 – Deacon Anders performs a gnarly exorcism on Bethany and roses start to bloom all around her.
EXT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
Bethany goes on a terrible date that has some strange but subtle (ignorable) supernatural elements to it. The guy leaves the date while Bethany is mid-sentence.
Inciting Incident:
INT. CHURCH – DAY
TE 2 – Brad, an old friend from elementary school, sends a request to Bethany via her dating app. She’s working with Deacon Anders on her computer doing something for the Church at the time and he sees it. He warns her to think twice about responding.
[Placeholder] Bethany goes on another disastrous date. She checks her dating app and sees that the guy left a bad review. As she reads it, she sees a message pop up from Brad asking her to coffee. She tells him she doesn’t think it would be a good idea. He says he understands and asks if she can recommend a spot.
INT. COFFEE SHOP – DAY
Brad shows up and asks her if he can buy Bethany a coffee. They catch up and a romantic connection is sparked. He asks her out.
INT. CHURCH – DAY
TE 3 – She gets into her first fight ever with Deacon Anders over not going on the date with Brad even though they sparked a romantic connection during their coffee catch-up. Bethany criticizes him for being passed up for bishop even though that’s all he wants and he has the added advantage of having performed an exorcism.
Turning Point:
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
TE 4 – Bethany is stood up by Brad who leaves a cryptic message with the restaurant hostess.
Act 2:
INT. CHURCH – DAY
Bethany apologizes to Deacon Anders for what she said about him not being a bishop and tells him he was right about Brad. He tells her that it’s ok if she is not cut out for dating and urges her to stop dating or at least give it a long rest.
[Placeholder] Something has to happen that makes her want to break her old pattern of forgetting and moving on. Maybe she sees a post about a former classmate’s wedding or maybe she sees a happy couple walk out of Deacon Anders office thanking him for the excellent relationship advice. Maybe she has a dream that some unseen force tells her it will never let her go. She decides to pursue Brad.
New plan
INT. APARTMENT – DAY
She tries contacting Brad but can’t track him down.
INT. COSTCO – DAY
TE 5 – She chases after an ex suitor on the job at Costco to find out why he stopped seeing her and ends up watching a tape of her exorcism in the breakroom with the guy and his coworkers.
[Placeholder] There needs to be a montage of her interacting with different guys and all of them showing her the same video.
EXT. FARMHOUSE – DAY
Bethany goes to her parents’ farmhouse and asks them if they are sending people the tape of her exorcism. They tell her the only person who made a tape of that was Deacon Anders.
Midpoint Turning Point:
INT. RECTORY – DAY
TE 6 – Looks for Deacon Anders in the rectory and sees bouquet after bouquet of rotting roses. The Cleaning Lady says she has no idea where they come from, they just keep appearing.
Act 3:
INT. COFFEE SHOP – DAY
Bethany connects with Koju on her dating app and sets up another date.
TE 8 – Deacon Anders finds her and has a friendly chat with her. Bethany excuses herself and goes to the restroom, leaving her laptop open.
New plan:
INT. HEALING CENTER – DAY
TE 9 – Bethany meets with Koju. He tells her that her suspicions were correct and he received a video of her exorcism. He tells her that the entity is still attached to her and it’s growing stronger.
INT. NEW AGE SCHOOL – DAY
TE 10 – First lesson at a New Age school, Bethany connects to her inner God power and sees Demon 23.
INT. NEW AGE SCHOOL – DAY
TE 11 – Bethany uses Cosmic Mind Telepathy to connect with Deacon Anders, but Demon 23 sends her an image of a pentagram.
INT. NEW AGE SCHOOL – DAY
TE 12 – Bethany uses transcendental awareness to project a message of peace and love to Brad.
Turning Point:
INT. DEACON ANDERS’S CHAMBERS – DAY
TE 7 – Breaks into Deacon Anders Chambers and finds a pentagram, a book of conjuring spells, and other occult items. Deacon Anders knocks Bethany out and kidnaps.
Act 4:
INT. BETHANY’S SOUL – DAY
TE 13 – While unconscious, Bethany travels into her soul and invites Demon 23 to meet her there. She shows him that she can send him back to his origins, but he strikes up a deal with her to let him get back at Deacon Anders.
INT. CHURCH – NIGHT
Bethany wakes up and her church to find herself restrained on the altar. Deacon Anders has just played a video (same video Bethany watches at Costco) of his exorcism of Bethany for the congregation including the Bishop and Cardinal.
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
INT. CHURCH – NIGHT
INT. BETHANY’S SOUL
TE 14 – Deacon Anders conjures Demon 23 and has it repossess Bethany in a demonstration of his power. He says that he will now cure her with exorcism, but Bethany telepathically projects Demon 23 into members of the congregation while protecting them with her Inner God Power. Demon 23 shows them how Deacon Anders used the occult to make Demon 23 do his bidding so that he could ascend the rank of the clergy and become the Pope.
Resolution
INT. Pope HQ – DAY
Deacon Anders is taken to the Vatican by the bishop and the Cardinal to be stripped of his affiliation of the church by the Pope himself.
INT. BETHANY’S SOUL – DAY
TE 15 – She meets Demon 23 once again in her soul. He tells her his attachment to her changed from possession of her to something closer to love for her. He tells her visited Brad in a dream and threatened to possess him if he didn’t call Bethany and give her another chance. He tells her to expect his call. Ready to leave for good, he allows Bethany to guide him back to his origins.
INT. APARTMENT – DAY
Bethany’s phone rings.
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
TE 16 – At a restaurant, Bethany does a quick exorcism of a guy floundering on a date and tells him his mother invoked a demon to stop him from meeting a woman and leaving her. The guy thanks her and she walks to her table where Brad greets her with a kiss.
COMMITMENT
I commit myself to following the High Speed Writing Rules to get my script done at record speed.
Rule 1: Understand writing in drafts.
Rule 2: Choose speed over quality for EARLY drafts.
Rule 3: Allow yourself to start (and continue) without all the answers.
Rule 4: Use empowering self talk. Cheer yourself on.
Rule 5: Give yourself freedom to write without criticism.
Rule 6: Keep moving. Don’t allow yourself to ever stall out.
Rule 7: if it doesn’t come to you, give it to your creative mind to process.
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CHERYL:
I don’t appear to have received Lesson 7. I’ve completed Lesson 6 and just received Lesson 8, but missing 7. Thank you. I’m enjoying the lessons, although… feeling a little overwhelmed.
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Deni B. Sher’s High Speed Beat Sheet
What I learned doing this assignment (because I am basing the script on my real life and the book I wrote and published) is to pick out the most important actions and reactions that happened over ten years and later figure out how to tie everything together. I did do this in 2 days, but didn’t post and believe me, it’s far from perfect!!!
OPENING
VO by DENI
INT. RENTAL APARTMENT – SOUTH BEACH – DAY
Deni puts Chris in Art School, rents apartment, buys car.
INT. CLUB – SOUTH BEACH – NIGHT
Chris meets Sandra partying.
INT. RENTAL APARTMENT – SOUTH BEACH – DAY
TE 1: Chris kicked out of apartment. Deni scrubs art off walls to get deposit back
INT. COMPUTER COMPANY – DAY
TE 2: Deni lets Chris and Sandra live in loft above her company and hires both to work for her.
EXT. COMPUTER COMPANY – DAY
TE 3: Deni catches Chris stealing a computer from her and lying to her.
She writes him a letter telling him he’s a thief and a liar and he needs help that she can’t give. Gives him time to get a passport.
EXT. AIRPORT – DAY
Sends him to Germany with Sandra who is from there.
INT. HAUFBRAUGH HOUSE – MUNICH – NIGHT
INSERT: Five Months Later
Deni laughs and enjoys being with Chris and Rachel.
INT. DENI AND ARTHUR’S HOME – NIGHT
Arthur is proud of Deni for handling having Chris away.
INT. COMPUTER COMPANY – DAY
Deni receives phone call from Chris in Germany.
INCITING INCIDENT – Deni agrees to fly Chris home from Germany after one year. He swears he is clean and sober. Wants to turn his life around.
ARTHUR reminds her of all his lies. Discussion is inciting incident. He doesn’t want Chris to live in their house more than a few days.
INT. DENI’S CAR – DAY
Deni and Chris have a discussion about letting the past be in the past and Chris moving on with his life. (Page 8)
TURNING POINT Deni invests $8000 to set her son up again with car, apartment, clothing, cell, food. He doesn’t hold jobs. Deni continues to pay rent.
TE 4: Deni learns he is depressed and drinking alcohol again.
INT. CHRIS’ RENTAL APARTMENT – DAY
TE 5: Deni hits emotional rock bottom. Does tough love. Kicks him out.
EXT. PAWN SHOP – DAY
Major fight. DENI tells Chris to call his old girlfriend in NC and move up there with her. Chris says he hates Deni and she’s a horrible mother. DENI Drives home in tears.
ACT 2
INT. DENI AND ARTHUR’S HOME – FAMILY ROOM – DAY
Deni cries her eyes out at home.
Deni Surrenders to her Higher Power – Lets go – Lets God
Asks God, How does a mother turn her back on her son.
INT. DENI AND ARTHUR’S HOME – DENI’S OFFICE – DAY
TE 6: God answers
NEW PLAN
Deni sits and writes for 4 hours. Runs searching for painting on paper and finds it. Believes she has a calling to write a musical. Calls it Mom’s Opera.
FAMILY ROOM – LATER
Deni shares what happened with Arthur. (page 26)
PLAN IN ACTION
EXT. CHRIS’ TOWNHOUSE – DAY
Rachel and Chris finish packing his car and drive off.
INT. CHRIS’ TOWNHOUSE – DAY
Deni enters a filthy townhouse and starts cleaning and continues paying the balance of 3 months rent. 29
INT. DENI AND ARTHUR’S HOME – DAY
Rachel calls Deni for help. 28 Phone conversation.
MIDPOINT TURNING POINT
TE 7: Rachel finds coke in his pant pocket, he keeps money from her. She attempts to kick him out. He gets hepatitis from alcohol. Quits drinking for 5 months and calls Deni.
TE 8: Chris invites Deni to visit. Arthur intervenes, warns her not to give in and believe him.
ACT 3
Deni visits Chris and Rachel.
TE 9: Deni sees Chris’ artwork and it tears her up inside as it visually shows his pain.
RETHINK EVERYTHING – Chris still in anger. I ignored my own emotions and pushed everything down. I was walking on clouds because my son didn’t die and hadn’t drank for 5 months.
Deni invites Chris and Rachel to their wedding.
Deni and Arthur marry 5/24/03. Chris and Rachel attend the wedding.
EXT. NEW YORK CITY – DAY
Deni goes to NYC in her quest to write a musical. Pg 63 Started projecting and creatively visualizing into the future, totally believing both our lives would have a happy ending.
Thought about causes of addiction.
Writings were a way not to deal with reality. I used my writings to confirm Chris was okay. Writings were saving grace. I needed hope.
INT. RACHEL’S TOWNHOUSE – NIGHT
AUGUST 2003 page 81
TE 10: After being sober and clean for 8 months, Chris relapses. Drinks beer. Does coke. Begs Rachel not to throw him out. Promises to go to rehab to appease Rachel.
INT. DENI AND ARTHUR’S HOME – DENI’S OFFICE – DAY
Deni writes Chris a letter for his birthday. SEPT. 2003 p.85
Learned from Anne, in my co-dependency, I was caught up in my own insanity by thinking an addict could understand a logical letter.
INT. DENI AND ARTHUR’S HOME – DENI’S OFFICE – DAY
TE 11: Admits he’s an addict 10/28/2003. Goes to first NA meeting.
Deni gets an email from Rachel the next morning. Pg.89
Wept happy tears. Thanked my higher power for leading Chris to his first NA meeting.
NEW PLAN
Rachel and Chris agree to stop speaking to me and work on their relationship issues alone.
I decided to send Chris a letter. Pg.91
(Later I would learn I violated Chris’ boundaries of detachment and used this letter as a passive-aggressive way to express my anger and frustration.)
INT. DENI AND ARTHUR’S HOME – DENI’S OFFICE
SPRING 2004 we started speaking on phone.
INT. DENI AND ARTHUR’S HOME – FAMILY ROOM – DAY
They visit Deni and Arthur in FL for Mother’s Day.
Chris’ grandmother promises him $1000 to quit smoking.
Grandmother lends him $2,000 to buy a mountain bike.
Chris quits smoking cigarettes 5/22/04 Grandmother gives him half the money to put down on a car.
Deni offers to pay for him to go back to college.
Summer 2005, Chris attends College.
INT. NEW YORK CITY – ASCAP SEMINAR – DAY JUNE 2006
Deni went to NYC for a 3 day ASCAP Seminar with Stephen Schwartz, Adam Epstein, David Stone and even Joseph Stein who wrote Fiddler on The Roof. Pg. 115
Met Janice, who knew Andrew Lloyd Weber.
INT. KAREN’S CONDO – DAY
Wrote songs with Karen about Denial and One More Promise. Started reading books on addiction. Recorded songs.
Wrote many songs. Pgs 128-146
MARCH 2007 Karen and I recorded our songs with singers.
INT. NEW YORK CITY – RESTAURANT – DAY – 2007
TE 12: Deni Meets Anne Salter, An addiction therapist at lunch and Anne only lives 40 minutes from Deni in FL.
OCTOBER 28, 2007 Chris clean 4 years
Completed all but 3 credits in college to his A.A. Degree. Making $30,000/year as graphic designer.
INT. DENI AND ARTHUR’S HOME – FAMILY ROOM – DAY
TE 13: Deni edits Anne’s book, Family Stew about familial dysfunction. Pg. 168, 174. I learned so much.
INT. NEW YORK CITY – STAGE – SEPTEMBER 2009
Deni does a monologue as part of Expressing Motherhood on stage along with other mothers expressing motherhood. Pg.183
TURNING POINT: HUGE FAILURE/MAJOR SHIFT – 2010
TE 14: Chris relapse on prescription Adderall for ADD.
Rachel is fearful for his life. APRIL 6, 2010 Contacts Deni while she’s in Japan. Says he’s chemically becoming a monster with a death wish. Lost 40 pounds. Arthur adds as change agent. Pg.198
ACT 4
CLIMAX/ULTIMATE EXPRESSION OF THE CONFLICT
Deni manipulates Chris with little white lies
Deni arranges a make-shift intervention pg. 208-210
RESOLUTION: Chris goes to rehab for first time. 4/26/2010
Mother’s Day Card. Pg. 211
Deni visits him and they meet with therapist.
TE 15: Deni admits to her issues of co-dependency and takes an honest look at how she got to where she is as a co-dependent mother.
INT. CHRIS AND RACHEL’S TOWNHOUSE
Chris gets out of rehab and asks Deni not to contact him. That he will contact her when he’s ready. She respects his space.
INT. DENI AND ARTHUR’S HOME – BEDROOM – NIGHT
SEVEN MONTHS LATER
Deni writes a poem, praying he’ll come back into her life and the next morning her phone rings…
“Let Me Love You Again, my Son” p. 269
Deni VO and end.
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Chuck Czech’s High Speed Beat Sheet
What I learned — write fast or die in quicksand. I’m committed to use these High Speed Writing Rules to get my script done at record speed.
ACT 1
INT./EXT. RONAN’S CAR – TRAVELING – NIGHT/DAY
Ronan Cambridge drives on a lonely desert road at night, the radio keeping him awake. He seems to be on a solitary endless journey.
The next morning, Ronan navigates heavy traffic with ease, compulsively talking his way through every turn signal and lane change. A road rage driver flips him off; Ronan cheerfully gives him a thumbs up.
EXT. CONSTRUCTION SITE – MORNING
When Ronan’s delayed at a road construction site, a high tech capsule in his trunk comes to life, blinking lights and hissing vapor. Only when Ronan jumps the curb and drives through a ditch does the capsule become inert again.
INT./EXT. RONAN’S CAR – TRAVELING – DAY
Ronan continues his solitary journey, stopping for no more than an hour. During one stop he’s able to nap, eat, brush his hair and go again. At another stop he gets his oil changed by a friendly mechanic, who apparently services the vehicle every 3500 miles.
FLASHBACK – INT. LABORATORY – NIGHT
Ronan has flashbacks to when he placed the capsule in his trunk — in a smoking, ruined laboratory. Dead people are scattered on the floor — a scientific research team — including Paulina, a woman he likes, and an old man, his father.
EXT. SMALL TOWN – DAY
INCITING INCIDENT: Ronan visits a small town he seems familiar with (How do we know this? Why is this town important? Is it a meeting place for the research team? A pick up point for his father?)
TE 1: Ronan nearly hits a woman in a crosswalk. It’s Paulina. But it’s not. Ronan knows she died. He’s rear-ended by an aggressive driver — a Stranger — and then an SUV plows into the Stranger’s car. Alarmed, Ronan allows the ersatz Paulina to ride away with him.
INT./EXT. RONAN’S CAR – TRAVELING – DAY
The woman tries to convince Ronan that she’s Paulina, but is not 100% convincing. She wants to talk about the capsule in the trunk, which Ronan refuses to discuss.
Ronan adapts to having a companion, eventually allowing Paulina to drive so he can have a proper sleep.
FLASHBACK – LABORATORY – DAY
Ronan dreams of the laboratory, where he was a lab assistant and his father was chief scientist. Paulina is among the staff.
EXT. REMOTE ROAD – DAY
Two Strangers try to run Ronan off the road, but Brendan arrives in his SUV and fights them off. Ronan sees that the body of a Stranger is not human, but an engineered organism that looks human.
Act 2
INT./EXT. RONAN’S CAR – TRAVELING – DAY
TE 2: Despite Ronan’s protests, Brendan abandons the SUV and hops in the car. He drives away with Ronan, Paulina and the capsule. Ronan doesn’t want Brendan aboard and becomes defensive, feisty.
Brendan breaks the news — he and Paulina are not the people Ronan knows — they’re from an alternate version of Earth that had been conquered by a hostile species — the very same species that’s trying to destroy this version of Earth by introducing a deadly invasive organism through the capsule device.
PLACEHOLDER: Set ground rules for the capsule — it’s a kind of bomb that’ll release a monstrous organism.
EXT. TRAFFIC STOP – DAY
TE 3: When Brendan’s inexperience allows the capsule to partially wake up, Ronan proves himself adept at driving stealthily and taking care of the capsule.
PLACEHOLDER: What kind of situations can Ronan excel in — Talking his way out of a ticket? Taking a random exit to keep the capsule quiet?
INT./EXT. RONAN’S CAR – TRAVELING – DAY
Brendan insists they return to the abandoned lab to figure out a way to shut the capsule down; Ronan thinks this is a mistake because hostile parties would make this the prime place to look for them.
INT. RUINED LAB – NIGHT
They discover the lab and find the chamber where Paulina and Brendan came to this Earth. They also find evidence that other entities followed.
They’re able to review records downloaded from the alternate Earth from which Paulina and Brendan escaped — they watch a video that shows the destructive capabilities of the organism.
A group of Strangers find them and nearly capture them, but Ronan escapes alone in the car, leaving Paulina and Brendan on their own.
PLACEHOLDER: How do Paulina and Brendan escape?
Act 3
EXT. SMALL TOWN – DAY
TE 4: Understanding his solitary journey is pointless, waits for Paulina and Brendan at the small town.
FLASHBACK Ronan remembers being with his father the day the project was approved as a private venture — it happened at a headquarters of a private organization.
Paulina and Brendan arrive and Ronan drives them all away.
INT./EXT. RONAN’S CAR – TRAVELING – DAY
Ronan proposes a new plan — that they return to the project headquarters to get access codes to reprogram the capsule device to destroy whatever’s inside — the only catch is it’s in the heart of a big city.
EXT. CITY – DAY
Ronan drives them to a congested city where their slow place threatens to activate the capsule. Ronan has to enter the headquarters and is forced to trust Brendan with the capsule.
INT. NEW LAB – NIGHT
TE 5: PLACEHOLDER: Ronan implements the new plan involving new people and a new laboratory.
Act 4
INT. NEW LAB – NIGHT
Against Ronan’s protests, Brendan tries leading the new team — but fails.
TE 6: Ronan fights Brendan to prevent him from saving his own skin and jumping over to a different version of Earth in the multiverse, thus destroying this world.
Ronan prevails, and Earth survives. (Needs work (-: )
Resolution
TE 7: Ronan is confident enough to go out on his own and invite Paulina to join him.
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H. Vince’s High Speed Beat Sheet
The 30-Day Screenplay – 2023
Lesson 7: Beat Sheet and High Speed Writing
What I learned from doing this assignment is…
The difficulty in trying to come up with the exact locations in a day or so where Victor is at but I’m just going to keep moving and turn this as is.
Act 1:
INT. FAST FOOD RESTAURANT – DAY
Opening: Victor is ordering some food on his lunch break
PJ: Chill acquaintances with rich young adults but doesn’t relate
EXT. OUTSIDE FAST FOOD RESTAURANT- DAY
PJ: Walks up to less than perfect Honda
EXT. ON THE ROAD DRIVING – DAY
Numerous stops before going back to work
INT. JEREMY’S HOUSE – NIGHT
VICTOR TRANSFORMATIONAL EVENT: Disappointed when he wakes up from a black-out
AJ: Donna is upset not knowing where Victor was all night
INT. MECHANIC SHOP – DAY
Inciting Incident:
PJ: Victor makes a joke about the dents on his hood to the mechanic
Mechanic puts Victor on blast on social media
VICTOR’S TRANSFORMATION EVENT: Gets cancelled
Placeholder: Victor meets up with his good friend and girlfriend and some kids show up recognizing him
EXT. AUTO MECHANIC SHOP – DAY
Turning Point:
PJ: Victor shows up to mechanic shop to talk to him about what he did
People show up trying to get involved
Black-out
VICTOR’S TRANSFORMATION EVENT: Kidnapped
Act 2:
INT. UNKNOWN ROOM – UNKNOWN TIME OF DAY
New plan:
PJ: Victor wakes up tied down not knowing where he is
VICTOR’S TRANSFORMATION EVENT: Forcefully given eyedrops to see alternate outcomes
Plan in action:
PJ: Victor decides he wants to know about his mom
AJ: Donna can’t find Victor
EXT. ABORTION CLINIC – DAY
Midpoint Turning Point:
VICTOR’S TRANSFORMATION EVENT: Finds out about his real mom and that Donna was assigned to take care of him
Act 3:
Rethink everything:
AJ: Flashback to Donna’s assignment
VICTOR’S TRANSFORMATION EVENT: Victor finds out why he’s important/special
New plan:
AJ: Victor finds purpose
PJ: Flashback to Donna teaching Victor alternate ways of living but with caveats
VICTOR’S TRANSFORMATION EVENT: Trust people he’s just met recently
Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift:
PJ: Victor is just a regular guy who makes mistakes and not a hero
AJ: Donna and her people find information on where Victor is
Act 4:
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:
PJ: Victor’s chip was taken out by his kidnappers
AJ: Donna feels lost not being Victor’s “mother” any longer
VICTOR’S TRANSFORMATION EVENT: Realizes there’s no going back with what he knows now
Resolution
PJ: Victor changes his physical identity
AJ: Donna gets killed
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Joy Geldard-Smith’s High Speed Beat Sheet
What I learned doing this assignment is… because of the groundwork I’ve laid in the previous assignments, getting this basic outline wasn’t so tough. It is only about half as many scenes as I need, and there’s still a bunch of stuff I don’t know, but that’s why screenwriting is a process, so I’m OK with that. It’s still progress!
1. Listen to the Empowerment Audio – DONE! :o)
2. Decide to intentionally use the High Speed Writing Rules throughout the rest of this program.
Rule 1: Understand writing in drafts.
Rule 2: Choose speed over quality for EARLY drafts.
Rule 3: Allow yourself to start (and continue) without all the
answers.
Rule 4: Use empowering self talk. Cheer yourself on.
Rule 5: Give yourself freedom to write without criticism.
Rule 6: Keep moving. Don’t allow yourself to ever stall out.
Rule 7: if it doesn’t come to you, give it to your creative mind to
process.I agree to intentionally use the high speed writing rules – done is WAY better than perfect (because perfect doesn’t exist!).
3. Use the High Speed Writing Rules as you create your Beat Sheet.
Pass 1: Organize your Structure and Transformational Events.
Pass 2: Add slug lines.
Pass 3: Add placeholders and additional scenes.Int. MADISON’S WORK – DAY
Madison excelling at her boring accountant life. She is being given a promotion (so we know she is talented and special). She calls her bestie – who pleased but calls her boring? Says she’ll be stuck at the accountancy firm forever.
Ext. CAR DEALERSHIP – Day
Madison impulsively buying a bright red convertible to prove to people that she is exciting. The dealer asks what the occasion is and when she explains, he practically calls her boring too. She says the car was calling to her and that she isn’t boring, and does a voice where the car talks back and tells her it doesn’t let boring people drive it. Something like that.
Int. PLACEHOLDER – DAY
[Something else here that makes her realise she has to change. She goes to celebrate with her bestie and as they’re going out, some related child calls her boring or asks her if she wanted to be boring when she grew up? Then at the bar she also gets told she’s too hot to be an accountant because accountants are boring? Everyone knows that!]
Int. JOSE’S APARTMENT – Night
[Do I need a set up for Jose? He’s psyching himself up?]
Int. MADISON’S APARTMENT – MORNING
Madison calls in a sick day.
Ext. streets – Later
Madison enjoying her new car, talking to it like a friend, and feeling crazy and spontaneous.
Int. puzzle rooms reception – Later
Madison greeted by reception, saying she’s always wanted to do something like this. They are rushing and not really listening to her. She is shoved into a room and the door locks. The receptionist then says ‘oops’ but can’t open the door.
Int. puzzle room – continuous
This will need to be intercut somehow – maybe with folks outside? – to stop it from getting too boring.
She meets Jose, who tells her to get out. She obviously can’t. He tells her about his project. She calls him pretentious. They waste a lot of time fighting, and then she basically tells him tell will end up locked in there unless he bucks his ideas up. He paints, refusing to work with her, and she solves the puzzles that he can’t.
She says that his work looks like he’s playing it safe.
int – puzzle room reception – Later
They emerge from the puzzle room to meet Jose’s manager, who spills the beans that the whole thing was livestreamed. Madison is even more furious, even though he says it was a hit.
Int. MADISON’S WORK – The next day
Madison goes into work, complete with accessories trying to show that she’s still sick. She receives a call (via switchboard) from Jose’s manager, who asks her to do another puzzle room. She says don’t call her again.
int. local news – That same night
Madison is having a TV dinner and sees footage of ‘Local Artist Jose and Mystery Woman’. Cuts to bestie, parents and her manager all watching with the same disbelief. [And the cute kid, if there is a cute kid in it.]
int. MADISON’S WORK – The next day
Madison goes into work and is promptly fired!
ext. streets – Day
Madison driving home with the car, asking the car how she’s going to pay for it.
int. PLACEHOLDER – Later
What is a non-creepy way for Jose’s manager to have tracked her down to speak to her again? Sure, he called the office and they said she was fired, but they wouldn’t give out her details. Probably need to set something up with Jose about a favorite coffee shop, or comfort food, or something like that. ???
He convinces her to do more puzzles and agrees to a 50% split, thinking it won’t last long. She says she doesn’t know how he can represent someone like Jose, and she’s only doing it because she got fired after just buying a sweet new ride so needs the money.
int. puzzle room 2 – Later
Madison and Jose do another puzzle room together. Sparks fly. Jose asks her about what she really wants to do and says now is the time.
int. arts college – Evening
Madison has secretly signed up to comedy writing classes/stand up.
int – puzzle room 3 – Day
Another puzzle room in the same city. Learning about each other and starting to laugh a little.
int. restuarant – Later
Madison and Jose are having a good time after finishing the room.
int – puzzle room 4 – Day
Jose spontaneously paints Madison.
int – restaurant – Later
Jose’s manager says that the fans are loving the new painting and there are lots of rumors. Madison isn’t that happy, though admits she likes the painting.
int – arts college – Evening
Madison getting some feedback on her work.
int – placeholder – Day
Madison’s bestie shows her all the speculation online about her and Jose. She says they’ve been getting on better but he’s still a pretentious douche. Someone films it and puts it on the internet, threatening the whole thing?
int. JOSE’S APARTMENT – Later
Jose sees the footage of Madison slating him after his manager calls to point it out. He’s upset but pretends he doesn’t care because he doesn’t like her anyway.
int. PLACEHOLDER – Later
Madison meets Jose (maybe at the comfort food cafe?) to apologize. He says it stings so much because there’s some truth in it, but explains why he seeks validation. She tells him about how everyone always calls her boring. He talks about his professor and what she said when they broke up. They have a moment, or maybe even kiss? Jose also tells her about a new exhibition he’s working on?
Int. MADISON’S APARTMENT – The next day
Madison thinking about what happened with them the night before. She’s running numbers and trying to figure out whether or not to quit. She knows she can’t go back to being an accountant, and her bestie points out that no firm would hire her right now anyway. Can’t keep working with Jose but has no option.
int. art gallery – Day
Jose’s Manager has arranged a meeting with an important client. He asks Jose to do something totally out of character. Jose refuses. Manager and Client are not happy. After the client leaves, Jose gets fired.
int. MADISON’S APARTMENT – Later
Madison and Jose catch up. She supports his decision. Says she’s ready to try her stand-up routine and organizes a gig.
int. PLACEHOLDER – Later
I guess something needs to happen here before she actually does the gig? Another obstacle to getting there?
int. comedy club – Night
Madison does her first ever comedy club. No one comes along except Jose, who is really sweet to her when she bombs. Maybe everyone keeps heckling her about her relationship with him?
int. jose’s family home – Day
Madison and Jose head to his hometown to get away from the attention. He explains what’s happened and his family are really supportive of them both.
int. art gallery – Later
Jose’s new show opens in his hometime. Madison tries to get critics to come, but only local papers show up.
int. jose’s family home – Later
Jose asks Madison to do one last puzzle room. Says he’s got a sponsor lined up and they could both use the money and a win. She says OK.
int – puzzle room romance – Day
Madison goes into the puzzle room blindfolded. Jose is painting again. She realizes all the answers to the clues are linked their relationship. At the end Jose proposes, she says yes.
int. jose’s family home – Later
The family are celebrating and there is news that art critics are showing up in the small town and they are loving Jose’s show!
Int. placeholder – Day
Wedding time!
int. comedy club – Night
Madison is doing her new one-woman show at a fringe festival. She gets a standing ovation.
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