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Lesson 7. Great Pitch 2: Compelling Query Letters
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BRIAN BULL – QUERY LETTER
VISION!!!
My ultimate goal is to get my scripts from my hands to the SILVER SCREEN!!
“What I learned from doing this assignment is…
Most of My work for this assignment was already done in previous lessons which made today’s assignment super easy.ASSIGNMENT
Write your query letter.
3. Write your Bio and add it below the salutation with the word “BIO:” before it.
BIO – My brother and I spent much of our youth fishing for catfish on the Bark River in Wisconsin as I am sure many other kids have done. It’s part of growing-up.4. Make sure it has all the Basics covered (from Part One).
Opening Hook
Synopsis
Request
Bio
Contact informationOPENING HOOK
With a staggering 50 million fishermen in the United States as of 2022, “The One That Got Away – A Fisherman’s Tale” finally encapsulates the true spirit of fishing – Drama and Suspense.SYNOPSIS
For 25 years, John has been fishing the same spot, with the same bait, determined to catch the same fish that had gotten away; a fish he blames for his brother’s death.As the full moon sets and the sun rises, deep in the Louisiana Bayous, with Spanish-cover Cypress trees and alligators lurking, there’s a sense of haunting beauty in the solitude as John patiently waits in his wooden skiff.
Reflecting on his past; learning how to fish from his Dad, the camaraderie he shared with his younger brother, his wife’s recent disapproval of his leaving to do this, John struggles with his determination for revenge and justice.
Recalling an ancient Indian legend, told by an old-timer at a Trading Post the previous day, John finds strength to continue his quest to apprehend the one fish that has eluded him.
After an imaginary conversation with his deceased brother, the bayou becomes eerily silent for a moment…and then…… the moment of reckoning.
John finally catches the catfish he has relentlessly pursued, and his determination of coming face-to-face with his nemesis has arrived, only to realize the startling truth: he himself was “The One That Got Away”; needless to say – to his surprise…it’s ONE BIG CATFISH!
REQUEST
If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.CONTACT INFO
BRIAN BULL
PO BOX 704
Redondo Beach, CA 90277
424 / 205-7277
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Margaret’s Query Letter
What I learned: I needed to condense my synopsis to make it short.
Query Letter:
Title: The Rock of Cashel
Concept: Patrick is pitted against the Queen of the Otherworld in a death-defying battle to save the life of the King. Inspired by the life and legends of St. Patrick.
Genre: Fantasy/Drama
Is there some truth to the legends of St. Patrick?
Patrick, a young man with a restless spirit, is unwittingly drawn into a world of darkness, captured by kidnappers disguised as fishermen, and taken to Ireland. Thrust into a life of servitude under Milcho, Patrick faces the hardships of captivity and a divine calling. When an ancient prophecy makes him a threat to the Queen of the Otherworld, Morrigan, she sends Bacrah, the high king’s chief druid, to kill him.
Will the Queen of the Otherworld succeed in deterring Patrick from his mission?
Patrick escapes Bacrah and returns to Britain where he receives a mission from God. He returns to Ireland as a priest determined to share the message of God’s love. Along the way, he encounters resistance, temptation, and betrayal, all orchestrated by Morrigan’s malevolent forces. Patrick faces Bacrah at the castle, captured, and sent to Mt. Cruachan where he faces the powers of the Otherworld.
Will Patrick survive the onslaught of the Otherworld?
As Patrick faces his inner demons and grapples with the supernatural, the story culminates in a breathtaking climax. The battle between light and darkness, faith and fear, unfolds with epic proportions. Divine intervention, miraculous occurrences, and the unbreakable spirit of our hero lead to a triumphant conclusion.
If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.
BIO: Margaret Silebi is an optioned screenwriter.
Contact Information:
Margaret Silebi 541-525-5592
Linked In: https://www.linkedin.com/in/margaret-silebi-aa90b033
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Lloyd’s Inquiry letter
Vision Working hard every day to become the best writer I can and as a result I do become the best writer in Hollywood.
What I learned from this assignment is… how to use professional inquiries to get script requests.
Imagine if an employed Iraqi translator were told by the U.S. State Department, he would be considered for an Immigration Visa only to be denied. After the war, the translator is left behind and branded a traitor by his own country. This happens every day.
Left Behind, Letters from Baghdad takes this reality one step further. Left Behind, Letters from Baghdad focuses on the moral and ethical struggles of a U.S. Army Sergeant in war torn Baghdad. SFC Miles Clark and his squad defies orders to save a murdered Iraqi interpreter’s widow and children from certain death at the hands of a vengeful terrorist.
Letters from Baghdad exposes the human cost of war and its injustices in a profound and deeply impactful way, highlighting the continuing horrors occurring in Iraq and Afghanistan today. Letters from Baghdad boldly intertwines the action-drama genre with a humanistic approach, making it a unique and emotionally charged war movie.
Covered by AFN journalist, Staff Sergeant Lloyd Shellenberger, this is a timely and poignant story inspired by true events. Lloyd Shellenberger is a film and television screenwriter, and independent producer. His perspective isn’t from the sidelines, he has actual war time experience.
REQUEST
If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.CONTACT INFO
Lloyd Shellenberger
1306 North Columbus Ave. Suite 215Glendale, CA 91202
747-210-1983Mars Production and Postproduction Services
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