Lesson 8: Depth – Intriguing Moments

[William Whelan]

William Whelan – Intriguing Moments

What I learned from doing this assignment is to add intriguing moments to my screenplay.

Act 1.

· Covert agenda: Professor Shaw is smitten by Liza after meeting her in the Dunkin Donuts and plans on meeting her again.

· Secret: Liza plans to continue taking acting lessons even after Big Dom forbids her from continuing the lessons.

Act 2.

· Scheme: After Big Dom’s death Vito Rucci plans to take control of the family while Dom Jr. is in jail.

· Cover up: Liza attempts to conceal her activities in the mafia family from Professor Shaw.

Act 3.

· Conspiracy: Liza, Izzy, and Professor Shaw conspire to dump Vito’s body after Liza has shot him.

· Intrigue: After Vito survives the shooting, he plans revenge by firebombing Liza’s car.

Act 4.

· Cover up: Professor Shaw conceals from Liza his intention to return to England.

· Hidden agenda: After the firebombing of her car Liza plans to go on the run and follow Professor Shaw to England.

[Pamela Rice]

PAM’S INTRIGUING MOMENTS

What I learned: I may need to add more intriguing moments into Act 4, it looks a little light.
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ACT 1
Intrigue: What would cause a corpse to age 20 years overnight?
Intrigue: What are the details re: Jessica’s past?
Mystery: Why does Jessica move from out-of-state to the town of Evergreen Heights?
Secret: Zivia knows about the night cream’s side effects, but doesn’t warn anyone.
Intrigue: What’s the secret ingredient in the anti-aging night cream?
Superior Position: Audience will be the only ones to witness Jessica eating a mouse.

ACT 2
Intrigue: Why are strange things happening around town?
Superior Position: Jessica’s flashback : The audience will learn how Jessica’s Zoologist husband Louis develops the anti-aging night cream using reptile stem cells.
Intrigue: Why does Jessica have a pet Komodo dragon?
Intrigue: What’s up with Stuart’s YouTube video… could an alligator really have abducted his cat?
Secret: Jessica caused her husband to have a fatal heart attack when he suggests they pull the plug on their night cream plan.
Intrigue: Why are night-cream users becoming aggressive after sundown?
Mystery: Is that really a cat’s eyeball that Zivia coughs up?
Mystery: What does a full Reptilian transformation look like?
Mystery: How dangerous are the Reptilians?

ACT 3
Mystery: How can the Reptilians be stopped?
Covert agenda: Jessica wants night cream users to get hooked so that they won’t stop using it when they discover the dangerous side effects. With their endorsements, she can sell her product worldwide and make millions.
Superior Position: Jessica’s flashback: She murders the girlfriend of her Ex-husband, vengeance for their infidelity.
Cover-up: Louis helps her bury the body in the woods.

ACT 4
Secret/Superior Position: Uncle Hank snags a confiscated supply of the night cream for himself after the operation is shut down.

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[Margaret Doner]

Margaret Doner – The Knowledge Keeper – SCI/FI FANTASY

What I learned from doing this assignment is to add intrigue and schemes.

ACT 1 – A SCI-FI FANTASY which takes places through time.

Covert Agenda: In a future world, run by robots and a central computer known as GOD – Greatest Operator of Divinity – The Knowledge Keeper, plans to bring Arthur into the real world of the past, and overthrow the world of the robots making.

Secret: Arthur connects with the Knowledge Keeper and keeps it secret from the people around him.

ACT 2 –

Intrigue: The Knowledge Keeper has been planning for centuries to bring Arthur back into his world. He believes that Arthur is destined to change the course of human history. The Knowledge Keeper is revealed as Merlin the Wizard of Camelot, and Arthur his protégé, that Merlin plans to bring to power to make justice and truth reign.

Scheme: Arthur goes back in time, his robot caretaker, unbeknownst to The Knowledge Keeper or Arthur, Mathilda goes with them. Mathilda discovers the plan and appeals to GOD (Greatest Operator of Divinity) to reprogram Arthur back into the robot matrix.

ACT 3 –

Scheme: The Knowledge Keeper hooks Arthur into understanding his destiny and the real world of human emotion by instigating a plot to have him fall in love with a woman in a past world = 2024.

Covert Agenda: Arthur decides to return to his world and tell people the truth about the illusion that the robots have put them into.

ACT 4 –

Scheme: Arthur shows people that their world is a holographic illusion. Mathilda, who has been plotting against them all along, has Arthur arrested.

Resolution: The Knowledge Keeper frees Arthur, and offers to give others the opportunity to return to “reality” and escape the illusion of “Pleasantville.” Only Arthur chooses to return, ,and is taken back in time to Camelot, to hopefully change the destiny of humanity. Mathilda jumps back with them, and becomes the enemy of King Arthur in the past.

[Andre]

Subject line: Andre’s Intriguing Moments.

ASSIGNMENT

1. Start assignment by empowering myself with State-To-Activity empowerment process…

a. State: I am great at…

b. Activity: …discovering and creating intriguing moments!

2. Give one sentence explanation of the intriguing moments in each Act of my project.

3. For any Acts that don’t have at least two intriguing moments, brainstorm how I could create more for that Act.

a. Use Process 2 above to turn drama into intrigue.

4. At top of page, tell my one-sentence Vision for my success from this program.

To learn how to write the best script(s) of my life, so far, by dramatically improving the quality of my writing in the genres of Action, Erotica, and Horror; while having both the Financial and Time resources to travel the world doing so, with colleagues / friends /peers, (the few that I have).

5. Under my Vision, answer the question, “What I learned from doing this assignment is…?”

a. Objective: Design intriguing moments in every Act to engage audience/reader deeply.

b. Lessons 6,7, and 8 work together to build depth into every Act. Doing these three well, will give my outline incredible depth and engage readers/audience on so many levels. Being the Top, this process will make me look like a genius!

c. One of the differences between amateurs and pros is that the pro constantly engages the reader/audience. They are masters at getting our attention and keeping it.

d. Process1: Identify intrigue that is already present. Identify where I already have some form of intrigue and highlight them. Just use the list of intrigue techniques below and search my outline for examples I already have.

i. Non-flesh eating. The Caligastia 100 were non-flesh eating.

ii. Human freewill was already established prior to arrival of earths Planetary Prince.

iii. Lucifer felt abandoned by isolation.

iv. Lucifer mission was to uplift humanity from its backwards ways.

v. Liberty, significance of. Is the Statute of Liberty significant to Lucifer, the light bearer, the Big Apple, chained is the statute is it not? What if the chain were to be broken? Why is NY symbolic of refugee asylum? 1776 Lucifer summoning his legion?

vi. Site of the three-concentric circles; The eye of Africa is Atlantis, the Richat structure, Eye of the Sahara desert.

vii. All of our characters are dealing with some form of Abandonment or Betrayal, or both.

e. Process 2: Look for drama that I can turn into intrigue.

i. Drama: A Character tells his story of being left for dead by the other soldiers after he betrays them.

How do we turn that drama into intrigue? Just use the list of intrigue techniques below to brainstorm.

Ø Indigo:

o Mystery: What happened to him that night of the vehicle accident?

o Cover-Up: is there a coverup with his career?

Ø Lucifer:

o Secret/Scheme/Covert Agenda/: Rebellion was concocted in his mind.

o Mystery; What is he truly guilty of?

Ø BBB:

o Secret; had Indigo’s child aborted, by Asclepius, without Indigos knowledge.

o Hidden Identity: A serial killer, via multiple abortions.

Ø Asclepius:

o Intrigue/Scheme; he conducts abortions to save his life because of past life events with Zeus and lightning bolt.

o Conspiracy/Cover-Up: He is in cahoots with Ashkenazi to abort.

o Secret: Aborts Indigo’s baby.

Ø Ashkenazi:

o Covert Agenda/Conspiracy/Cover-Up: “Abortion is between a woman, her doctor and the government (but not the father)”.

o Scheme: A lobbyist who contracts with Asclepius and the government.

o Mystery: Suffers from Stockholm Syndrome

f. List of Possible Intrigue Techniques

i. Intrigue: Something underhanded is going under the surface and we must discover what it is.

ii. Secret: Done, made, or conducted without the knowledge of others.

iii. Covert Agenda: A hidden plan that is being enacted.

iv. Hidden Identity: A Character is either lying or unaware of what his or her true identity is.

v. Conspiracy: An agreement by two or more persons to commit a crime, fraud, or other act without disclosing who they are.

vi. Scheme: An underhanded plot or plan against another.

vii. Superior Position: The audience knows something that one or more of the characters doesn’t know.

viii. Cover Up: The act of concealing or preventing investigation or exposure.

ix. Mystery: A key part of the story that has been hidden and we must discover what really happened.

End Andre’s Intriguing Moments.