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PARTNER UP FOR FEEDBACK
If you need a partner, post a “Partner needed” post here. Please reply to partner requests. You may want to include a logline of your project.
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40 Replies
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My name is Jackie Macgirvin. My screen plays are faith-based and/or clean humor.
Here’s the log line for my rom-com, Thanks For the Memories. It has an emphasis on forgiveness:
A 29-year-old, soured on
marriage by his parents’ divorce, struggles to cope when both parents end up
convalescing at his home. The father, with amnesia, doesn’t remember having a
son or ex-wife. The angry ex-wife schemes to get her ex-husband out of the
house on “mental issues.” A vivacious physical therapist challenges the son’s
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Partner needed!
My name is Bernice Ye. I know I’m probably the one with much less screenwriting experience than y’all 😅, but that also means I have fresh eyes from taking it all in from Hal’s model. And I promise you with great support, attention, and time. Also, from years of doing standup comedy, I did learn how to find the funny through authentic, vulnerable topics and stories.
Here is the logline of my screenplay, “The Girl with the Red Scarf” (working title):
A girl prodigy of China’s one-child policy pursues a triumph in the most important exam of her life but must sacrifice and betray her first love under the pressure of her school and family.-
This reply was modified 4 years, 1 month ago by Bernice Ye Ye.
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Hello Bernice, my title is OLD BUFFALO HOSPITAL adventure and romance. Ready to give it a whirl if you want to partner up.
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Awesome!! Let’s do it 🙂 Thanks for being my partner! I will take a look at your longline and one page tonight!
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Hi Bernice, the revisited version is really great. An interesting concept which is sure to be successful.
Bernice, sorry to say with big apologies, I am partnering up with someone in my genre. Best of luck with your learning adventure.
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I see. No worries… Do you mind kindly providing feedback to my assignment 1 as I did for you? It’s past the deadline for me to find another partner for assignment 1 and I would really appreciate some feedback. Thank you.
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If anyone would like to partner up I have a SciFi/Horror titled Soul Trafficker.
PJ
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Hi PJ this is Marcus and I’m interested in partnering up on assignment 1.
My Logline is – A deserted nature guy with animal senses bonds with a wolf and nosy camp kids to take down an animal-smuggling ring.
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Hey Marcus, looking for a partner if interested let me know.
My log line: A Nazi concentration camp commandant secretly collaborates with a Jewish prisoner to create a new kind of music.
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Hi Martin sure we can partner up. Have you posted your logline and One Page synopsis under the Day 1 Assignment Forum yet. Mine is posted there but I’m not sure if I see yours.
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No I have not… can you tell me how to find it?
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ok Marcus, sounds good. I’ll take a look at yours before days end.
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Thanks I will review you logline and One Pager now.
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Hi Marcus, I see we have some similar interests. Can we partner up ASAP need feedback to move forward thanks.
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Jackie,
I can relate with your logline. Can you make it a sentence??
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Alfred, If I’m limited to one sentence I guess it would read like this: A 29-year-old, soured on marriage by his parents’ divorce, struggles to cope when both parents end up
convalescing at his home — his father with amnesia, along with his angry ex-wife.Do you like that better?
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Hi Alfred, I’ve massaged it a little more after reading Hal’s info on log lines. Any feed back for me?
LOGLINE
REVISED: A
29-year-old, estranged from his parents, and soured on marriage from their
divorce, struggles to cope when both parents end up convalescing at his home —
his father’s amnesia prevents him from recognizing Jacob or his ex-wife.
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What’s up Team,
I’m looking for a partner to share my Logline and One Page with. If you need a partner let me know.
Thanks Marcus
Logline: A deserted nature guy with animal senses bonds with a wolf and nosy camp kids to take down an animal-smuggling ring.
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Please advise where the confidentiality agreement is located. I hope everyone is signing it.
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I didn’t see where we can sign that either. Would really appreciate if anyone who has done it to point us to the right direction:)
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Partner needed: Where do I post the logline and one page story?
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Do you still need a partner? Your logline intrigues me.
My rewrite is based on my novel, Once in a Blood Moon. Logline: When her mother dies and her father is murdered by racists eager to seize his estate, the heiress, daughter of the wealthy African American Plantation owner flees for her life.
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Partner needed. Historical fiction: Logline: The daughter of a wealthy African American planter flees for her life when her mother dies and her father is murdered by racists eager to seize the plantation that now belongs to her . Inspired by a true story.
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Hi there Dorothea (my first name is Dorothy BTW) I am a bit behind and need a partner.
I need feedback on my beats and elevating, which I had to shorten to get the assignment in.
I have read your story and like the meat of it. Anna
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My name is Rico. I’m looking for partner/s sharing my passion to be able to tell my story, and your stories, in the most effective and entertaining way.
My story is about a middle-aged man who have lived in America for more that 25 years but never lost his desire to go back to his native land and help in the needed transformation. He went for a visit, but his trip turned into a nightmare when he encountered the same, even worse, enemies of the land- poverty, corruption, lawlessness, ignorance and human rights abuses- reasons why he left in the first place. Disappointed, he went back to America, never losing his hope that someday he can go back for good in his beloved birthplace.
It is my hope that the human and cultural interest of my story will entice others to walk with me through this trek. Thank you.
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Rico. I like what you say about your need to tell your story…about longing for home. I would be interestested in teaming up with you. Let me know if this also works for you.
Dorothea Bonneau
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OK Dorothea, let’s partner up and give it our best shot. It appears like our stories has a similar theme. I hope that our schedule will fit our class’s schedule. With Hal’s and Cheryl’s guidance, I think we should be able to get our stories going. Thank you for your interest in teaming up with me. Let me know if you need more information about my script.
Rico
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Hi @Rico Cadayona and @Dorothea Bonneau ,
I know you two are already paired up, but my partner went with a different partner within her genre, and I was originally very interested in partnering with you since you are writing in topics and themes that I feel passionate about (myself is a middle-aged immigrant who lived in America for 17 years).
So I’m wondering if you are interested in doing a three-way partnering up, or if any of you is interested in taking up another partner. It’s a long shot but I would really appreciate your consideration. Thank you so much for helping out a fellow student.
This is my logline: The Girl with the Red Scarf
A girl prodigy of China’s one-child policy pursues a triumph in the most important exam of her life, even though she is cruelly punished by her school and shamed by her family because she falls in love.
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I would be delighted to collaborate in a three-way. It does seem like our themes have something in common.
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Bernice,
What an intriguing storyline. The protagonist faces a dilmena that’s universal for people who are coming of age: making a choice that will affect her future. I can’t seem to find my way back to your synopsis. Could you send it to me, please? dorotheabonneau@gmail.com
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Hi Dorothea! Thank you so much for taking me up as a partner! And yes, let’s all exchange contact so it’s easier to collaborate.
My email is bernice.ye@gmail.com. I will email you to include my one page. Please email me your assignment one too, it seems to have been removed from the forum. Thank you so much!!
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Rico,
Could you please send me your logline and synopsis? I can’t find my way back to Assignment one.
Dorothea Bonneau
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Rico,
I’m having trouble navigating on this site. Could you send your logline and synopsis to dorotheabonneau@gmail.com?
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Hi There,
My name is Christina Parker. I’m from Australia.
I need a partner please.
Adventure/Family 8 episode TV Series
Logline: Connor, 14, finds a mysterious Egyptian box in an abandoned mineshaft. Opening it unleashes the ten plagues of Egypt on his town. Connor and his friends have to battle not only the plagues but two desperate criminals to stop the last plague, Death of the first-born.
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Hi, Christina,
Would you consider partnering with me?
My logline: Logline: Lane Baer, a mid-list writer, takes a job teach literature in a girl’s school to support his family. The history teacher is murdered. On the day of his death, all the three Baers cross his path. Who is the murderer? The Papa Bear, the Mama Bear, or the Baby Bear?
Your work is more family oriented but the principles for telling a good story are the same. I’m a little late looking for a partner. I think this platform is difficult to navigate.
Onward
Elizabeth Appell
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Hi Elizabeth,
I would love to partner with you. Your story is very interesting. I love murder mysteries, my first play was a murder mystery, and it a huge success.
Blessings
Christina
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Hi Elizabeth,
How are you going with your homework?
Anything I can help you with?
Blessings
Christina
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“Partner needed”
THE GREEN UMBRELLA
Logline: The death of a disgraced actor reveals his covert CIA identity and his role in conspiring to economically enslave the global population culminating in a revolution that brings a second enlightenment aided by a new political system, ancient indigenous mysticism and technology.
lol
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Hey Douglas, replying to your partner request… Logline could be interesting….
Mine,
Felsbrocken
A Nazi concentration camp commandant, secretly collaborates with a Jewish prisoner to create a new kind of music.
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Hello Douglas,
Do you still need an fb partner? I also need a partner. Read your story, liked it a great deal.
Think the green umbrella symbol is very important. PS I am brief and to the point.
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