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ROB’S LEVEL 3 HORROR EMOTION SCENE
What I learned: I learned that Anguish, Horror, Panic and Hysteria are Level 3 Horror Emotions. They are typically emotions experienced in the 3rd act and are the most powerful of the emotions.
This scene is the climax of the 3rd act, where’ Al discovers that his dying father is a serial killer. Al and Abby are searching for Ellie, who went missing with Jerry.
INT. BASEMENT KILL ROOM – NIGHT
Abby and Al stand in the open doorway, staring into the black abyss of the mystery room. The stairs to safety stretch upwards behind them.
AL
I…I Had no idea this room even existed.
(calls)
Ellie?There’s no answer. Abby closes her eyes and reaches out with her senses.
ABBY
She’s in there. Come on, look for a light switch.Abby steps inside. Al follows, feeling around for a light switch.
AL
Found one.CLICK. Nothing happens.
The iron door SLAMS shut and ECHOES through the room. It’s now PITCH BLACK. Al panics.
AL
Oh my God! Abby?! Abby!A hand touches Al’s shoulder in the dark.
ABBY
I’m here, next to you.AL
Jesus! What is that smell?Abby CLICKS on her flashlight. She sweeps the beam of light across the room to reveal Jerry Scheckla’s Kill Room.
The walls are covered in opaque plastic sheeting, splattered with blood and gore. Shelves line the walls with apothecary jars filled with eyeballs, fingers and human teeth. God knows what else.
AL
Wha…What the fuck? How could this…Abby shines her light on an old workbench. Tools of torture hang from hooks above it.
Al is overwhelmed with anguish. Tears flood his eyes as he steps backwards. He trips over some luggage and falls to the ground.
The luggage tag reads: Barbara Scheckla.
AL
Barbara! Barbara?!Al unzips a suitcase. It’s full of BLOOD and GUTS.
ON AL’S FACE as PANIC and rage burn in his eyes. Al breaks down.
AL
Barbara! No! No, God! Why?!Abby kneels down to console Al, but he brushes her off and heads for the iron exit door.
AL
Leave me alone!A SCREAM from behind the plastic stops him cold.
AL
Ellie!?Abby swings the flashlight towards the sound. Something is behind the plastic.
ABBY
(points)
There!Al rips the plastic away in a frenzy, revealing a wood paneled door.
INT. TROPHY ROOM – BASEMENT KILL ROOM – NIGHT
Abby and Al enter Jerry’s most private sanctuary.
The room is lit by candles that eerily illuminate trophies of murder victims that line the wall. Female heads, arms, legs, torsos, all expertly stuffed with the precision of a taxidermist.
The bodies of the Hospice Nurse and Barbara sit opposite each other in chairs made of human bones.
At the end of the room, presiding over all this madness, sits a wheezing Jerry Scheckla on an old bloody couch. One hand holds an oxygen mask to his face. The other arm is wrapped around Ellie, holding a knife to her throat.
Ellie’s eyes are filled with HORROR.
AL
Ellie!Al’s eyes shift to the knife at her throat. His heart drops as rage bubbles to the surface.
AL
I’ll kill you!Al moves forward, but stops as Jerry presses the knife harder. A pinpoint of blood drips down Ellie’s neck.
JERRY
Don’t take another step, boy, or I’ll cut ‘er deep. Show ya what the black stuff looks like.ELLIE
crying)
Dad!Jerry pulls her close.
JERRY
Shhh. There, there. He’s gonna listen. He always listened. Didn’t ya, boy?AL
Fuck you!Al, takes another step. Abby puts a hand on his shoulder and stops him.
ABBY
Jerry. You don’t want this. Look at Ellie. Look at how scared she is.Jerry looks. For a moment, his face shows regret.
JERRY
They were all scared.Abby takes another step forward. Jerry’s face flashes anger.
A low TREMOR begins to shake the room.
JERRY
(angry)
They deserved it! Every single one of them whores!ABBY
Does Ellie deserve it, Jerry? She’s your granddaughter. Your blood.AL
Dad, let her go.Jerry takes a long breath off his oxygen mask. The tremor explodes into a RUMBLE.
JERRY
I told ya. Don’t open that fuckin’ capsule till I died! But you couldn’t wait. Could ya?ABBY
Jerry, you don’t want to do this. You want to be stopped! Don’t you see?JERRY
I didn’t want ya to find out this way, boy.ABBY
You manifested all of this. Every ghost. Every attack. All the paranormal activity is your guilty conscious begging you to stop.Tears in Jerry’s eyes, tell Abby she’s on to something.
ABBY
That’s right. Think about it. You’re punishing yourself, Jerry. Don’t punish Ellie too.The room is a paranormal storm of energy. Items fall and break. A large CRACK rips through the wall behind Jerry.
Jerry is in distress, fighting against his evil nature.
JERRY
I…Can’t…Jerry’s Trophies rattle and shake.
JERRY
I…Trophies fly from all directions, shattering upon contact.
JERRY
Want…The candles blow out, bathing the room in darkness. Abby points her flashlight straight at Jerry.
JERRY
One more kill!Jerry raises the knife above Ellie and prepares to strike.
ELLIE
Grandpa! No!The last glint of kill-lust twinkles in Jerry’s eyes.
ABBY
(screams)
STOP!A wave of psionic energy bursts from Abby. The concussion takes Jerry by surprise. The knife is ripped by Jerry’s hand, flies across the room and embeds in the wall.
Ellie shoves Jerry off and runs to her father.
Jerry crumples. Too weak to manifest paranormal activity.
ELLIE
Dad. I thought he was…He said he was…AL
Shhh. I got you now. I got you.Abby looks at her hands.
ABBY
How did I…Jerry’s breath is slow and loud like a death rattle.
ABBY
He doesn’t have long.ON JERRY’S EYES as he stares up to the ceiling. Death is coming for him.
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ASSIGNMENT 12 – NADIA’S LEVEL 3 HORROR EMOTION SCENE
(Title: “GRAHAMSTOWN”)
What I learned from this assignment: I learned that to get the sequence of horror emotions right, I may have to move around some scenes from one Act to the other in order to get the crescendo in the horror experience going.
ACT 3—FULL OUT HORROR:
EXT – JAMES’ CAR – PITCH DARK
James lifts the hood, everything looks normal; as he walks around the car, he notices the petrol tank has been pierced and has been leaking petrol. He is then hit over the head with a stick violently and falls to the ground.
Naomi calls out his name and there’s no answer; she is terrified but slowly unlocks the door to go find James. The door is then yanked open and she screams as she is being dragged outside towards the rear of the car.
James is lying on the ground, unconscious and bleeding from a big gash on the head while MR JONES, the owner of the butcher shop – a jovial man in his sixties – holds a knife to his throat while smiling at her. She is about to scream when MARY, the nice coffee shop owner, puts duct tape on her mouth and tie her hands behind her back while ordering her to get on her knees.
Naomi can only watch in horror as James wakes up and seizes the situation in horror, trying not to panic for her sake, and gets Mr Jones starts slicing his throat, slowly, making him gurgle on his own blood, before slowly and methodically cutting his chest open, pulling his beating heart out and handing it over to Naomi , delivering sweetly ‘his heart is yours forever’.
Naomi tries to close her eyes but Mary brings an ice peak to her eyes, urging her to open them and not to even blink or she’ll be blind; Naomi as no other choice than watch James agonise and die in front of her.
After James is dead, they release Noami in the field and order her to run;
They get into James’ car and start chasing her, blinding her with the car lights.
EXT – FOOTBALL FIELD – NIGHT
Naomi runs, frantic and totally hysterical – it’s obvious that she has gone mad!
When she reached the end of the field she sees the road and hope gives her a new wind; she runs in the empty road as she glances behind her, the car has stopped, she starts laughing hysterically as she reached the middle of the road, screaming silently under the duct tape;
Out of nowhere, a DELIVERY TRUCK speeds down the street and HITS HER HEAD ON, sending her body fly like a puppet in the bushes by the road;
The driver doesn’t stop; the lights of James car switch off.
THE HORROR EMOTIONS IN THE SCENE:
Anguish: Naomi gets out of the car and sees that James has been attached and is lying on the ground, injured and passed out. Next to him, a man she knows well and never feared is now standing next to James and holding a big butcher knife.
Panic: She wants to scream but is quickly shut with duct tape by Mary, another familiar friendly face, and she is forced to get on her knees.
Horror: Naomi is forced to watch in horror as her boyfriend gets tortured and killed in front of her eyes; his beating heart being ripped out of his chest.
Hysteria: After watching James being tortured and die, she is being released and chased and, running away blindly, straight onto the road where she gets hit by a truck and dies.
SCENE WRITEN AS 1st DRAFT TO INCLUDE THE 3 EMOTIONS:
EXT – JAMES’ CAR – PITCH DARK
James lifts the hood, everything seems normal; as he walks around the car, he notices a puddle on the ground; he crouches to check it out: a knife has been stuck through the petrol tank, petrol has been leaking generously. Before James gets a chance to get up, a hard blow hits him over the head and he collapses to the ground.
Naomi is checking out the rear mirror, looking for James; it’s dark out there, she can’t see anything but she could swears she heard something. She calls out his name but there’s no answer; she calls again, louder this time, shouting ‘it’s not funny James, you’re scaring me… you know I don’t like it!’
SILENCE follows; she swears and reluctantly cracks the window open, calling his name again, this time more hesitantly. Terrified to get out but worried about James, she takes a deep breath and unlocks the door; very slowly opening the door, one leg comes out, lightly touches the ground and she stops and listens.
Nothing but a light breeze; the second leg comes out and she starts getting up and out when someone takes her by the arm to help her out; she smiles and says ‘James, where have you…’ but her words die and a look of total surprise spreads on her face when she sees sweet MARY from the coffee shop standing in front of her, smiling sweetly.
Naomi smiles back at her, out of reflex, then notices that she is holding something behind her back; before she can get to ask what it is Mary is telling her that James is waiting for her and leads to the back of the car, the grip on her arm getting stronger.
It’s very dark and Naomi has to squint to distinguish a dark shape on the ground: it’s James! unconscious and bleeding from a big gash on his forehead while MR JONES, the owner of the butcher shop – a jovial man in his sixties – holds a knife to his throat with a big smile.
Naomi is about to scream when Mary’s hidden hand swiftly comes out holding duct tape and in a flash roughly takes care of her mouth while a third person she can’t see tie her hands behind her back and a male’s voice whispers for her to get on her knees; shaking, she watches in horror as James wakes up and seizes the situation, dread and pure fear spread in his face as he quickly tries to put on a brave face and fighting away the panic, for her sake;
He smiles and whispers ‘I love you’ to Naomi as Mr Jones starts slicing his throat, slowly and methodically, while watching Naomi’s eyes go wide in horror while trying to scream though the tape; then Mary leans over and starts chanting ‘his heart, his heart…’ and that’s when James realises what they have in plan for her and urges Naomi to ‘close your eyes!’ but Mary brings an ice pick close to Naomi’s eyes saying ‘you close your eyes now and you’ll never see again!’;
Naomi as no other resort than watch as Mr Jones CUTS JAMES’ CHEST OPEN and REMOVES HIS BEATING HEART.
Naomi faints; when she wakes up, James dead body is gone, a pool of blood confirming that it wasn’t a nightmare and she is alone.
Still gaged and with her hands tied, she looks around and struggling to get up on her feet, she is blinded by James’ car headlights; then the driver’s window opens and Mr. Jones shouts ‘run for your life little Naomi, we’re coming for you!’
Terror sizes her as the car engine revs up.
EXT – FOOTBALL FIELD – NIGHT
Naomi starts running blandly, straight ahead of her, with the car behind, lights flashing, teasing her, driving her to total hysteria – it’s obvious that she has gone mad!
Naomi manages to reach the end of the field, she can see the road ahead and hope surges, giving her a new wind of energy;
Naomi runs in the empty road; she glances back: the car has stopped at the edge of the field; she starts laughing hysterically, tears running down the duct tape, a glimpse of hope in her eyes;
Out of nowhere, a DELIVERY TRUCK speeds down the street and HITS HER HEAD ON, sending her body fly like a puppet in the bushes, back onto the filed;
The driver doesn’t stop; the lights of James car switch off.
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JAYE’S LEVEL 3 HORROR EMOTION SCENE
What I learned is that they key to these emotions is to build and stack unrelenting. Hopefully I have done this successfully.
Setup:
– We’re down to three kids, who for the most part have managed to avoid the terror and/or deny.
– Robert is David’s brother.
– David is looking for Josh and he’s been told earlier not to go in the back room because Robert is “up there jerking off.”INT. UPSTAIRS BATHROOM
David starts to leave, but a harsh wind and rustling get his attention. He walks to the window and looks outside.
The wind is strong, whipping the branches of the willow. He checks the creek, and the forest beyond.
A shadow glides past the doorway and he jolts; turns.
DAVID
Josh?He peaks out into the hallway.
DAVID
Robert?A soft scratching calls his attention to the closed door at the end of the hall.
David approaches.
He reaches for the knob. Thinks better of it. Leans in, listens.
A low moan comes from beyond the door. David shudders and scrunches his face. No one wants to hear their brother come.
He sighs, shakes his head and steps back.
He makes his way back to the stairs and the door pops open behind him.
He turns around.
DAVID
Dude, no one wants to hear you–The room is dark.
David goes back. He pushes the door open more.
A subtle shape of the outline of a person stands in the window behind a sheer curtain. Robert doesn’t notice. He glances around the room. No sign of Robert.
DAVID
Robert?He steps inside.
David hears soft, overlapping whispers.
He has a bad feeling, but he proceeds.
DAVID
Dude…He steps closer to the bed, and as he nears the window, he sees Robert laying on the ground, still, eyes open, a mouth hung open desperate for air. His pants are down.
David freezes. His breath catches in his throat. His heart sinks and he drops to his knees beside his brother.
DAVID
Robert?He turns Robert’s head to him. His lips are purple and he’s completely lifeless.
DAVID
Oh God…David scrambles for his phone. He pulls it out. His hands shaking violently, he dials 911.
There’s no ring. But the line is open. He can hear something. White noise.
DAVID
Hello?
(beat)
Hello? Is someone there?Eerie silence… and then the distant sound of babies crying.
The color drains from his face, and he looks around the room.
DAVID
(into phone)
Hello!A tear falls down David’s face. He pulls himself up. Listening to the sounds of distant cries.
He looks at his phone. No service.
He sees the figure in the window. The shape has now filled in with a silhouette. It emits a low moan. He swallows hard and takes slow steps toward the door. The figure in the window starts to turn around…
FIGURE
(whispers)
My baby……as a non-existent wind blows the curtain aside, revealing nothing!
David is already bolting to the bedroom door. It starts to swing shut! But he dives and blocks it with his wrist!
He grabs the door jamb as the door presses itself harder into his hand. With all his might, he pushes the door open with his other hand and pulls his foot into the opening.
With a better positioning and grip, he forces the door open and stumbles down the hall toward the stairs. He falls and rolls. Marcus and Whitney meet him at the bottom, terror glued to their faces.
David can hardly lift his head and he can barely get up. He’s choking and gasping. Marcus helps pull him to his feet.
DAVID
We gotta get the fuck outta here!They run down the hallway to the backdoor. David is stumbling and sinking with each step, as if being held back. They pass the religious room, and a vacant-eyed Olivia is standing in the doorway. Candles lit up on the alter behind her.
DAVID
(gasping)
Liv… thank God.David takes her hand and pulls her to the door.
Marcus takes the knob. He tries to turn it. It won’t open! He turns the lock. It still won’t open!
WHITNEY
Hurry, Marcus!MARCUS
I’m trying! It won’t open it!WHITNEY
Unlock it!MARCUS
I’m trying!In the smokey glass window, a figure suddenly appears with a loud crash! Whitney and Marcus scream. It bangs on the door and shakes the knob ferociously!
Olivia pulls David into the religious room. Marcus and Whiney rush in behind. The door shuts behind them.
EXT. HOUSE.
Johnny stands outside the back door, banging on it, kicking it, trying the handle. Nothing is working!
He hits the glass with the lead pipe. Nothing!
He steps back and looks at the house. From floor to roof, left to right… He decides to try the kitchen window. He takes a resounding, resolved step, and then the back door ekes open.
He freezes and stares at the invitation.
INT. RELIGIOUS ROOM
David stumbles backward, tries to keep his balance, knocks things over. He grabs at his throat, gasping, hungry for air.
WHITNEY
(Frantic)
What’s wrong with you?!Her face falls, and her tears seem to suspend and a figure appears on his back! It’s the nun! Her swampy arm is wrapped around his neck! Her hollow eyes boring into Whitney and Marcus.
Marcus grabs a pitchfork against the wall. Whitney screams. Olivia watches, entranced. Her smile is blackened and her teeth are filled with creek muck.
Marcus facing off with David and the nun, aiming the pitchfork at their heads. The nun hisses, daring him to strike.
EXT. THE HOUSE
Whitney’s scream grabs Johnny’s attention. He bolts inside the house.
INT. RELIGIOUS ROOM
The door bursts open, and Johnny stands there with the lead pipe.
Whitney screams as Johnny grabs her arm.
JOHNNY
It wants you!He pulls her to the door, but Marcus punches the pitchfork, without hesitation and jamming its prongs deep into Johnny’s chest.
Johnny releases Whitney and stumbles backward. He falls off the pitchfork and across the hallway, banging his head on the wall.
Marcus comes out and hovers the pitchfork over Johnny’s body.
David struggles. The nun pulls him backward and chokes the life out of him as Whitney screams in both directions. David’s neck cracks. And cracks some more. His eyes go blank.
JOHNNY
(to Marcus/pleading)
Get her out of here.Marcus stabs again!
Whitney has dropped to her hands and knees, covering her face, screaming, sobbing.
WHITNEY
Marcus, stop! STOP!Over and over, just happy for the win in this time of hysteria…
…And then a harsh wind catches his attention.
He looks up and sees the open back door.
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BOB KIELY’S LEVEL 3 EMOTION SCENE
What I’ve learned from this exercise is a reiteration of the importance of pacing, so one has something additional horror to give at the climax.
Lesson 12: Level 3 Horror Emotions
INT. ROOM OF BASEMENT COMMON AREA – NIGHT
Anne and John have been locked in the room by Donna. Anne’s cat runs into the tunnel. John opens the door to the tunnel fully.
ANNE
John, don’t go in.
JOHN
It’s our only hope, Anne. Nobody can get through the forcefield.
He goes in.
ANNE
John. Come back.
She breaks down and pounds the door with her fists. She looks into the tunnel with tears running down her face. She goes into the tunnel. She goes deeper in and sees a shadow cast on the tunnel wall. The shadow comes closer. She runs into tunnel off the main ones. It’s slimy and filled with spiders. One drops on head head. She runs faster to a dead end. She bangs the earth with her hands and starts crying. Suddenly, she is graced from behind with a hand put over her mouth. A male voice whispers.
MAN
Shhh. She’ll hear you.
Anne struggles to get free.
MAN
I’m going to let you go, but don’t make a sound.
He releases her and Anne turns to see him. It’s a disheveled, bearded man in his 40’s.
ANNE
Who the fuck are you, and where’s my husband?
MAN
Name’s Jeremiah. I’m a resident of the mausoleum. She doesn’t know I’m here. Come on, I’ll lead you out.
ANNE
I’m not going anywhere without my husband.
JEREMIAH (MAN)
Ma’am, your husband… is likely dead.
Anne breaks down and cries.
ANNE
Leave me alone. Go back to whatever grave you sleep in.
She gets up and walks back to the main tunnel. After a minute, Jeremiah catches up to her.
JEREMIAH
Guess I got nothing better to do with the rest of my life.
They walk down the dimly lighted tunnel and see a figure that ducks back. They advance slowly. The shadow emerges again and grows in size. It’s John.
ANNE
John. She runs up to him and hugs him.
JEREMIAH
Time for that later folks.
JOHN
Who’s he?
The witch appears out of nowhere and is closing in fast.
JEREMIAH
Follow me and don’t look back.
They run fast and follow Jeremiah as he darts in and out of tunnel offshoots. The witches footsteps and cackling are getting closer.
WITCH
None gets out until I get one more soul.
The witch ejects an electrical charge at them knocking them down with the force. They get up and run toward a light that leads to the outside. They get to the opening. John pushes Anne up and out of the tunnel. The witch has caught up with John and Jeremiah and has them suspended in air.
WITCH
Which of YOU wants to come with the groundskeeper?
She drops them hard on the floor. Anne is screaming from above.
ANNE
John, please come up.
Jeremiah and John look at each other.
JEREMIAH
Go to your wife John. Sounds like she’s in need.
John hesitates.
JEREMIAH
Go John. Don’t deprive me of what may be the only gallant thing I’ve done in my life.
John shakes his hand and crawls out.
EXT. CONDO GROUNDS – NIGHT
A flash of light and a loud roaring sound comes from the tunnel. The ground begins to shake and the tunnel escape begins to close. Suddenly Anne’s cat jumps out of the whole before it’s completely sealed up. The electronic force around the condo vanishes and police and firetrucks descend on the scene.
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Deborah’s Level 3 Horror Emotion Scene
I learned that the level 3 emotions really help to make the climactic scene powerful enough to give the audience a sense of satisfaction that the ride they’ve been on has been worth it.
This scene is the climax of Act Three.
INT. ALIEN EXPERIMENTATION LAB – NIGHT
The robot leads them inside, followed by Andre, Sly, Eboni, Ian, and Pen. It seems deserted, but they aren’t letting their guard down.
They walk into the dark room, but their movement makes the lights come up, and they are faced with multiple horrors. Alien animals in various stages of transplantation. Living limbs and heads in vats of liquid.
Eboni, in a state of shock, wanders to another part of the room. The lights come on, and she is face to face with Kev’s head (the pilot from the beginning). It sees and recognizes her, and its mouth begins to move. Eboni screams in horror.
Ian is the first to arrive, but the horror also transfixes him. The others arrive, all but the robot. Andre and Sly watch as Kev’s mouth forms the words, Kill Me, in a silent plea. Sly lifts his gun and shoots the head. The vat breaks, and the head falls out at Ian’s feet. Ian backs away, weeping, falling, caught in hysteria.
Pen kicks the head away while Sly kneels by Ian.
SLY
It’s alright. You’re fine. I won’t let anything happen to you.
Sly’s quiet strength is enough to calm Ian down. Sly helps him to his feet, just as the robot calls from across the room.
Robot
Major, there are aliens present.
The warning comes a bit late, and three reptilian aliens attack. A fierce firefight takes place with Andre, Pen, and Sly trying to protect Eboni and Ian.
Eboni and Ian back away and through a doorway.
INT. ALIEN ZOO
They hear sounds behind them and slowly turn around to find a room of caged aliens. Some are insectoid, some are bird-like, and some have a hippo’s body with a frog face. As soon as they see Ian and Eboni, they scream or call, creating a cacophony of noise.
Ian turns and runs, but Eboni is frozen in place. (panic)
INT. ALIEN LAB
Ian comes barreling out into the room, right into a reptilian alien. He looks up, frozen in terror. Suddenly Sly is there, saving Ian’s life but unable to save his own. The alien takes him down. Andre and Pen appear from nowhere and kill the alien.
Ian kneels beside Sly, crying. Sly puts his and on Ian’s head.
IAN
Please, don’t die.
SLY
It’s all good. I don’t mind dying saving the life of someone worth it.
Eboni comes into the room. Andre comes and looks at Sly’s wound. There’s no hope. The two men grasp hands.
Sly
It’s been an honor.
Andre
The honor is mine.
Sly dies. Ian’s face twists in anguish.
The robot comes to look down at Sly. Eboni takes the robot’s hand. The robot looks down at her.
Robot
I won’t know death.
Eboni
Maybe you will. When I’m not around to keep you in good working order.
The robot stares at Eboni.
Pen is there as Andre stands.
Andre
We need to make sure there aren’t any more surprises.
Pen nods and checks her gun.
Suddenly a panel opens, and there is another reptilian alien, only this one is cleverer than the others. She grabs Eboni and holds her up as a shield, her claws pressing into Eboni’s neck as she makes her way to a panel on the wall. Here she punches in some numbers, and the panel slides away to reveal a ship.
Andre and Pen take up positions on either side. Andre lowers his gun.
Andre
Let her go. You can have me instead.
The Reptilian Princess hisses at him.
ANDRE
If you’re looking to make warriors, I’m better than she is.
The Reptilian speaks in a hissing voice.
REPTILIAN PRINCESS
And yet you are in such anguish you will do anything to save this one’s life. Interesting.
ANDRE
Let her go and take me.
The Reptilian cocks her head and looks at him a moment, then…
Reptilia Princess
No
And she slices her claws across Eboni’s throat. As the blood spurts out, the reptilian throws her out into the room, steps back into her ship, and the door slides shut. Pen’s shots barely dint the metal as the ship moves away.
Andre drops his gun and runs to Eboni’s side, putting his hand over her neck to try and stop the blood. But she can’t. (anguish)
Suddenly the robot is there and takes Eboni away. Andre is livid, but his blows on the robot do not hurt her. She works on Eboni, driving electrodes through her skull and into her brain.
Eboni’s eyes are wide and scared. Then the life drains out of them, and she’s dead.
Andre sobs, nearly collapsing into Pen’s arms. Both Ian and Pen are in tears.
Andre’s anger comes then, and he turns on the robot.
Andre
You hurt her. She was dying, and you hurt her.
Robot/Eboni
She didn’t hurt me, Daddy; she saved me.
All three survivors are in shock.
Robot/Eboni
She downloaded my consciousness into her.
Andre
Eboni?
Robot/Eboni
Yes… and no. I’m Eboni and the robot. I am also the alien technology we’re made from.
Andre
Eboni?
End Scene
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PATRICK MALONE LEVEL 3 HORROR EMOTIONS
What I learned was that the most intense horror should occur in Act 3. These last few lessons have taught me the different types of the various horror emotions.
Previous scenes leading to this scene: 1. Grant’s group caught Tammy when she attempted to retrieve the map. 2. When Emmett is killed by Amaruga, Clark freaked out, panicked and disappeared into the forest. 3.Grant and Max left Tammy to sink into quicksand. 4. By the Dead Lakes, Ollie entered a tunnel that may lead to the lost gold. He is suddenly attacked by Grant and knocked unconscious.
For expedience, I didn’t add dialogue at this time.
SCENE
INT. CAVE – DAY
Grant’s boot strikes Ollie’s face as he attempts to stand. Ollie falls unconscious.
Grant goes further along and turns into a second passageway. He is delighted to see a few gold coins and gold shavings scattered on the dirt floor. The treasure must be in reach.
The earth starts to rumble and shake. Further along the tunnel floor erupts. Grant freezes. Amaruga explodes from the hole. Grant screams and runs. Amaruga plods after him.
Grant finds a narrow tunnel and wedges himself in.
EXT. CAVE – DAY
A small opening in the rock by a Dead Lake. Grant pulls himself out into daylight. He looks around and recognizes he is just yards from the three Cypress trees that hide the cave’s main entrance. He runs along the shore of the lake.
Amaruga bursts from that main entrance. It spots Grant and starts its pursuit. Grant yells to Max who is waiting in the distance. Max signals to him to hurry. Grant trips. He stumbles getting up. Amaruga closes in. Grant gets to his feet.
Amaruga unleashes a mini twister. It engulfs Grant.
Ollie stumbles from the cave to see the twister rip off Grants clothes and peel away his skin. Amaruga pounces on Grant. Max screams and runs into the woods.
Bill, who has been waiting in the rowboat, waves to Ollie to get out of there. Ollie dashes into the forest. Bill rows out into the lake.
EXT. FOREST – DAY
Ollie sloshes waist-deep through a Cypress swamp. He reaches solid ground scared and exhausted. He sits and rests. He hears something moving through the bush. He rolls behind a thicket, waiting.
Two pairs of legs walk by. He looks up and is shocked to see Tammy and Clark. He calls to them. They are jubilant to be together.
Tammy recounts how she was captured by Grant and how he and Max left her to die in the quicksand. Clark says that he was lost, but then happened upon Tammy and extracted her from the quicksand.
Ollie tells them he found a cave that most likely hides the lost gold. But Amaruga defends it, and killed Grant. He shows them a gold coin and a small gold ingot from the cave.
Some snakes slither toward them. Amaruga is coming. They run.
They hear the pounding of heavy footsteps as Amaruga trudges after them. They are exhausted and terrified. Tammy needs a moments rest. Through the trees they can see Amaruga approaching.
Ollie no longer has his rifle to repel the monster. But Tammy has figured out that it must be afraid of fire; their campfires were put out when it was nearby.
Quickly they gather wood and brush and start a fire. They spread it out in line in front of them. As Amaruga gets loser Clark panics. His panic turns to anger. He picks up a burning stick and steps toward Amaruga. Tammy yells for him to stay back. He taunts the monster.
Amaruga exhales a monstrous breath toward Clark. The breath causes the burning sick to burst into a huge flame. Clark is set on fire. Tammy screams and runs to her fiancé. He collapses in a ball of fire. She falls to the ground weeping and wailing. Ollie is stunned seeing his best friend die.
Amaruga plods ever closer to Tammy. She is too hysterical to try to escape. One of Amaruga’s three clawed fingers reaches for her. Ollie runs and yells at the creature. It turns its attention on him and drops Tammy.
Ollie runs back through what is now a wall of flames. He taunts the monster. Amaruga unleashes a mini twister. The twister hits the flames and the fire explodes. It roars back at Amaruga and it. The wall of flames obscures Ollie’s view, but he hears the creature’s agonizing screeches.
Ollie goes and holds the terrified Tammy.
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Robert R. Smith’s Level 3 Horror Emotions
What I learned doing this assignment …? I learned how to build closing scenes into memorable horror.
Film: “The Toreph”
About the title: Toreph is singular of Teraphim, “Household gods” found in the Hebrew Bible (aka, Old Testament): Most notably, Genesis 31:19; I Am 19:13; Judges 17:5; 18:14; Zech 10:2. They were the mummified heads in the ancient Near East that were used for necromancy and divination after a gold plate with the engraved name of a demon was inserted into its mouth. The word “toreph” is also said to mean “filth.”
A scene using Level 3 Horror emotions of Anguish, Panic, Horror, and Hysteria.
Brainstorm what to do with the mummified head? Return it to the sarcophagus of the headless mummy of Cushan.
ACT 3 — FULL OUT HORRORC
INT. CAVE/TOMB OF CUSHAN –DAY (CONTINUOUS)
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It proves to be true, that if you approach the Toreph with no weapon, you can pass through the invisible barrier
..
Ned grabs the Toreph skull and pulls the Azazel nameplate out of his mouth. The demon Azazel no longer possesses the skull, all the invisible barriers he erected are eliminated.
KAITLYN
You did it! The skull is no longer possessed.
NED
Or, gone to possess someplace or someone else.
KAITLYN
(wryly)
Pleasant thought..
Kaitlyn and Barton don’t notice as Ned pockets the Azazel nameplate.
BOB
What should we do with the skull?
KAITLYN
Well, it is the skull of King Cushan, I think we should
return it to the sarcophagus.
NED / BOB
Agree.
Ned, carrying the skull, leads Kaitlyn and Bob Barton down the corridor to the clay anthropoid sarcophagus of Cushan. Bob opens the lid, Ned places the skull near the top of the headless mummy and Bob closes the lid. Ned, Kaitlyn, and Bob turn and walk toward the cave/tomb entrance.
NED
I think I know why the place is called Hill of the Two Devils.
KAITLYN
Why?
NED
Because two devils are here. Azazel and
Cushan the Doubly-Evil.
KAITLYN
Makes sense to me.
BOB
Me too.
NED
I bet that when Cushan was alive. He was aquainted with Azazel, probably through some spirit medium.
KAITLYN
Could be. .
Then, the sarcophagus explodes in back of them.
Kaitlyn, Ned, and Bob scream
The mummy of Cushan, now with his head rejoined to the body at the neck bursts through the sarcophagus and starts to limp on his 3.000 year old legs, meanacingly, toward Ned, Kaitlyn, and Bob.
BOB
What the F*ck!
AZAZEL / CUSHAN
This is not a game of chess.
Ned picks up the shepherd’s staff of Hassan.
NED
Oh, yes, it is. Royal Fork.
He plunges the shepherd staff into the mummy but it breaks.
Bob pulls out his pistol and fires at the mummy but it keeps approaching.
NED
We have no time for hysterics.
Let’s get out of here.
Ned, Kaitlyn, and Bob turn and run down the corridor and out of the entrance of the cave/tomb following Ned. .
EXT. CAVE/TOMB ENTRANCE – DAY.
Ned, Kaitlyn, and Bob exit from the cave/tomb. Above the cave/tomb entrance is a boulder.
NED
C’mon, Bob! Let’s smash this mother-f*cking devil..
Ned and Bob climb up around the entrance to the boulder above the cave/tomb entrance. Ned is there first and offers a hand to Bob to help him cave/tomb to the boulder.
EXT. CAVE/TOMB ENTRANCE – DAY.
Ned looks down to the ground at Kaitlyn – Ned’s P.C.V..
Kaitlyn climbs up to joins them.
KAITLYN
I thought you were an evolved man, Ned. What makes you think I
can’t join you and Bob to crush the mother-f*cker?
Kaitlyn extends her hand, Ned grasps Kaitlyn’s hand and pulls her up to stand with him and Bob
NED
Nothing! Now let’s be quiet.
Ned kneels behand the boulder with his hands on it, ready to push and strike. . Bob and Kaitlyn join him.
EXT. ABOVE THE CAVE/TOMB ENTRANCE – DAY (Continuing)
We see the top of the cave/tomb entrance from the P.O.V of Ned, Kaitlyn and Bob. For a painful several beats, the mummy makes no appearance.
KAITLYN
He’s not coming out.
NED
He’s coming.
Cushan / Azazel limps into the frame as he comes out of the cave.
NED
NOWWWWW!
Ned, Kaitlyn, and Bob push the boulder over the top of the entrance and on to the mummy of Cushan the Doubly-Evil. It strikes the mummy at the back and neck and crushes him.
Bob and Kaitlyn, slide down the sides of the hill next to the cave entrance.
Kaitlyn looks up.
We did it! C’mon down.
Bob slides down the side of the hill next to the cave entrance.
BOB
No, Ned did it! Killer instinct!
NED
A Royal Fork.
Although crushed. Azazel still speaks.
AZAZEL
(to Ned)
You’re wrong. You’re mine.
(gesturing a curse)
Fork you.
The hill collapses into the cave. Taking Ned with it.
Kaitlyn and Bob run down hill, to get out of the way and not get caught in this seismic event. When the cave-in ends. They run back. Kaitlynis especially anguished. They see Ned’s body partially covered with smaller rocks.
Ned opens his eyes and glares ahead.
KAITLYN
Thank God, you’re alive.
Kaitlyn and Bob remove the debris away from Ned.
BOB
Can you get up?
Ned extends his hand and both Kaitlyn and Bob help him to his feet.
Kaitlyn and Ned embrace. Abruptly, Kaitlyn pulls away from Ned..
NED
Let’s get the diggers to excavate.
BOB
Are you outta your mind?! We should level this place and make it a parking lot or something.
NED
We have to recover the bodies of Hassan and Kendrick. And we should pull out what’s left of the sarcophagus and return the mummy to it.
BOB
We just escaped with our lives and you want to dig back into this Hill of the Two Devils.
KAITLYN
Why are you so obsessed with this place?
NED
If we don’t, we’ll be the laughing stock of all archaeologists. And
And the only artefact we have is this.
Ned takes the Azazel nameplate out of his pocket and holds it up.
KAITLYN
That’s the key to all the evil and destruction
from the start. We should destroy it completely just as Dr.Leroux
said we should.
NED
And lose an artefact of ancient knowledge?
No way! I’m in charge of this expedition now.What I say, goes! Now, let’s get back to camp.
Come on, Katy-dit.
Ned walks on aheadt leaving Kaitlyn and Bob behind.
KAITLYN
I don’t know what happened, but Ned is not himself.
his is not Ned. He just called me a pet-name that
makes me sick. It’s a long story. But Ned would not
call me that name.
We should have the doctor examine him for brain
damage from a concussion.
BOB
I notice. He has a different personality..
NED
What’s the matter with you guys? Come on!
Aerial view of Kaitlyn and Bob catching up with Ned and the three walking on to the camp.
TITLE (SUPER):
THE END:
SUPER:
ROLL END CREDITS.
FADE OUT
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Pamela’s Level 3 Horror Emotion Scene
What I learned doing this assignment is…?
Interesting exercise to layer more action and details to a scene.
Look through your Act 3 scenes and pick one that you would like to write through all four emotions.
The remaining survivors open the closet and a woozy Marcus, cursing them out, is dragged by his feet to the middle of the office. The amulets placed around him. Ogilvy leads the incantation. Marcus starts moaning, groaning. They think it’s working. Nothing happens. Marcus chastises them for being too loud, his head hurts.
Then Terrance starts yelling and his eyes disappear, and his hands become big, and he reveals himself as a member of the Care Center.
Sybil yells to run for the roof and takes the lead. Except young Lily runs the other direction down the hall and screams at the Terrance monster to come and get her. Lily has played a lot in the secret corners of the school and knew of another way to the roof and decided to use herself as a decoy. Sybil and Clara run towards her, and the Terrance monster turns and gives them a sinister look stopping them in their tracks. He disappears down the hall. Ogilvy follows them as they head in the direction that Lily ran. Potter hustles the children, Miles and Chantel, in the other direction to the roof.
Sybil finds the Terrance monster cornering Lily and Lily is screaming, crying. Her tears are from anger that this monster killed her parents. The Terrance monster for a second looked confused. In that moment, Sybil threw an amulet at him. He treats in pain. She grabs Lily and they run up the stairs with Ogilvy and Carmel to the roof.
The storm is raging, winds gusting uncontrollably. Potter pulls out LaPierre’s walkie talkie. He forgot he picked it up. He starts calling for help. The Sheriff’s Office picks up. Just as he is telling them what is happing, the Terrance monster was down but not out. He appears on the roof and sets his sights on the children.
Clara goes into protective mode and steps in front of the kids. She reaches in her pocket for an amulet and finds that it must have fallen out. Sybil and Carmel see this. Sybil steps up and demands the monster take her and not the kids. Potter finds a crowbar in a toolbox bolted to the roof floor. Potter comes up behind the Terrance monster and hits him. The Terrance monster turns around and hits Potter. Potter gets up and makes a last effort to stab him with a crowbar, but the Terrance monster tossed him from the roof to his death.
The Terrance monster turns back to the kids. Standing behind the kids and Clara is Ogilvy. It was then that Sybil saw Ogilvy’s hands grow large. He was a monster from the Care Center. Just as Sybil ran to stop Ogilvy from sneaking up on the kids, Clara sees the Terrance monster raising his arms to attack. She was ready to throws herself on the kids, not knowing the Terrance monster was trying to save the kids and kill Ogilvy. Clara’s intestines ripped out from her back. Clara sacrificed her soul for the kids. The kids scream in horror. Ogilvy laughs with delight. But the Terrance monster gets the last laugh.
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