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Emmanuel’s Act 3 Turning Point
What I learned doing this assignment is the 3<font size=”1″>rd</font> act turning point raises the stakes. The protagonist is now in serious trouble, and you must show that there is no mercy.
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Lee’s Act 3 Turning Point
What I learned while doing this assignment is…I can still keep producing script even though I’m distracted or wish I was doing something else. I just keep writing and cranking out junk—I’ll be able to change it more easily later if it’s already down.
Outline
BEGINNING – Milly and Granny Sue have made it inside Janus’s secret underground compound, even as Justin and the life-size toys are engaged with Janus’s perimeter guards as a diversion.
Things seem to be going well. Milly and Granny Sue have found what seems to be the main control room in the compound, and Justin and his army are ready to enter through the big back garage doors.
MIDDLE – Suddenly, the back garage door opens, and a horde of more heavily armed soldiers charge out. Justin calls for a retreat, and his men fall back. But, at the top of the ramp that they’ve descended, they run into an invisible barrier. Justin at first can wave them off using “the magic word,” but suddenly, it no longer works.
Milly and Granny Sue advance silently into the cavernous control room. No one sees them—except dozens of perimeter guards who line the shadows around the cave. Several approach as Milly and Granny Sue are about to enter an office in search of Marcus’s location. Granny Sue uses an air duster to blow some off their feet. Milly uses her speed and agility to knock over some more. The Shield Granny Sue constructed holds up under fire from both guns and small energy bolts shot by other guns.
But then the shield drops of its own accord. Janus turns around from his post in the control room. Approaches them.
END – Justin and his soldiers are trapped. They engage the perimeter guards, but it’s no use. Most of his soldiers are either hit and turn back into to toys, or just are turned immediately by some magic spell.
After a brief standoff with Janus, he releases his hordes from under the cave overhangs. Granny Sue fights bravely, but is quickly overwhelmed and captured. Milly fights on, her eyes focused on Janus as she knocks guards here and there on her way toward him. When she finally does, there’s a brief exchange before Milly’s completely overpowered by Janus’s magic and knocked out.
THE SCENE
EXT. THE RAMP – DAY
Justin and his “army” fight intensely along the ramp as soldiers in odd, futuristic uniforms use both traditional and futuristic weapons like particle beam guns and laser ray weapons.
Some of Justin’s people have the same kinds of weapons and engage them. Others fight with whatever they have.
Justin’s tank blasts away at the doors down at the ramp’s end. Justin waves his hand again.
JUSTIN
Begone! The magic word!
The next tank shot blasts part of the door, though it doesn’t collapse.
JUSTIN
Ha-ha! Fire again. Head for that breach guys!
They all do, when suddenly, everything goes haywire.
The battered garage door opens, and what looks like a hundred or more perimeter guards stand ready to counter-attack.
JUSTIN
Holy cow! Where did they come from?
(to his army)
Fall back! Retreat!
INT. JANUS’S UNDERGROUND COMPOUND – MORNING
Milly and Granny Sue sneak through several empty offices as they creep down a wide hallway.
Marcus isn’t in any of them.
Presently, they come to the end of the hall. Granny Sue pulls a thin nail from her bag of tools.
GRANNY SUE
Just like the old days.
The nail magically heads for the door’s lock. After a moment of Granny Sue directing it by moving her fingers around, the lock clicks.
Carefully, the two peer through the door. There’s a huge, cavernous control room on the other side. Lots of control panels, flatscreens, stuff that looks like banks of servers, set inside a cave whose ceiling looks to be endlessly high.
Technicians word diligently. They note General Janus bent over a monitor with several technicians.
Carefully, the two creep into the shadows around the control area. They look around, see no one, though it’s pitch dark everywhere but in and around the control area.
GRANNY SUE
(in Milly’s mind)
I have a tiny light. We’ll search the dark areas, look for your father. We’ll stay together. Follow me.
EXT. THE RAMP – DAY
Justin and his tank bring up the rear, try to cover his men’s retreat by firing into the horde of perimeter guards.
They all seem to turn into toys once they’re hit!
JUSTIN
Oh my god! They’re a toy army too. What the hell?
Suddenly, he hears cries from those behind him. He turns. His men run into an invisible barrier at the top of the ramp.
JUSTIN
Oh no!
(to his tank commander)
Get me back there.
THE INVISIBLE WALL…
Justin arrives in the midst of his anxious army. He waves at the wall.
JUSTIN
Begone! The magic word!
The men dash through it. Justin heaves a sigh of relief…
And then, everyone crashes into another barrier! Justin plows through them to the wall’s edge, once again waves his hand.
JUSTIN
Begone! The magic word!
Once again, it disappears–and the horde of perimeter guards get closer.
No sooner have they run another twenty feet, and SMASH! Another wall!
Justin waves again.
JUSTIN
Begone! The magic word!
The wall…doesn’t budge.
JUSTIN
Oh shit…
He and his soldiers turn. The perimeter guards are upon them.
INT. JANUS’S UNDERGROUND COMPOUND
Milly and Granny Sue continue with her small light to search the dark areas around the central control center.
They find nothing. Both become more tense.
GRANNY SUE
This don’t seem right. There ain’t even any supplies or things here. I wonder–
Her light suddenly illuminates two eyes and a face. A perimeter guard, though her skin glares a bit unnaturally.
Behind her, Granny Sue can see at least a dozen more pairs of eyes.
GRANNY SUE
Run!
The two dash off. Suddenly, lights come on around them. Perimeter guards dash after them–by the dozen.
They head back to the door that they came in by, but another light comes on across the cave, and more perimeter guards charge towards them.
The din now in the cavern is deafening as perimeter guards race to cut them off.
GRANNY SUE
Get to the door!
Milly turns on her super-speed. She’s there in an instant. She fiercely battles perimeter guards, knocks them every which-way, but there’s so many of them!
Granny Sue stands and “spins away” a bunch of her pursuers with her enchanted electric screwdriver, and then again with an air duster.
But all at once, they all stop working. She runs on to Milly. The try to go through the door, but it won’t open.
They’re trapped. And then, their magic Shield magically disappears.
EXT. THE RAMP
Justin sits, battered and bruised, on top of a tiny toy tank. The last of his soldiers is hit, leaps high, and falls to the ground as a plastic soldier.
Justin’s surrounded by perimeter guards. A few come out of the crowds toward him. Justin can see that they’re not life-sized toy soldiers.
SOLDIER 1
Don’t worry…to much. Our General wants to see you.
He grabs Justin. Another soldier handcuffs him.
JUSTIN
Okay. I guess that’s better than getting killed, right?
SOLDIER 1
Maybe. And don’t try any of that magic stuff. That would be very bad–for both you and your friends.
Justin’s face shows surprise, but no one’s talking as he’s led in. Behind him, perimeter guards fall in. They leave toys scattered everywhere.
INT. JANUS’S UNDERGROUND COMPOUND
Granny Sue’s knocked out but not before “nailing” a bunch of perimeter guards with a nail gun.
But Milly fights on. The perimeter guards can’t do much with one so strong and armored.
She wades through them, knocks them to and fro, her eyes always on Janus, who smiles wickedly at the scene.
Just as she gets to him, he raises his arm. A small mini-missile points at her. He launches it from his arm.
It tears into Milly’s arm. Another explodes on her leg. She falls, writhes in pain.
Janus strolls to her as the perimeter guards back away.
JANUS
Milly, Marcus’s adopted daughter, I assume.
(to a nearby officer)
Throw that net on her. It should hold her. Take her to the cells.
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Ed’s Act 3 Turning Point
What I learned doing this assignment is that I wrote the turning point in the last assignment , however did not recognize that scene as a ACT3 turning point. I went back, developed the scene further so that the character’s failure and emotional duress was stronger. Now he has reached a lowest point in his journey, at least in Draft one.
EXT. NEW YORK CITY – THIRTY FORTH STREET – NIGHT
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Street sign reads thirty forth street.
New Yorkers bundled up agains the cold traverse the busy street. Christmas decor adorns Department stores and their street windows, guarded by wooden toy soldiers.
Jingling bells becomes louder and louder. Pedestrians stops. Looking around. From the out of the darkness above Henry glides the sleigh down to the street.
SAWWISE
You sue you want to do this kid? I think every New Yorker is on the Naughty List.
The sleigh glides to a stop in the middle of seventh avenue and thirsty fourth street. Traffic stops, horns blare. New Yorkers gather cautiously around the sleigh.
Henry stands up. Taking it all in. Cell phone cameras fixed on him. He adores it.
HENRY
My name is Henry Pelznikel
A NEW YORKER yells.
NEW YORKER
Hey that’s Santa’s Sleigh. You stole it!
HENRY
It was an accident.
NEW YORKER
What about all the other kids? You taking their Christmas away.
The crowd not on Henry’s side. The murmurs and catcalls.
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Cell phones text message – NAUGHTY LIST – HOLD THE SLEIGH
BACK TO HENRY
Samwise senses the crowd is getting hostile.
SAMWISE
Kid this is not working.
Some of the crowd step forward. Others follow. They take hold onto the bridle straps. The reindeer stomp in fear.
SAMWISE
Kid the reindeer, they’ll spooked, Come on.
HENRY
(To crowd) Listen to me. The North Pole is melting. They need our help.
Yells from the crowd denouncing Henry’s message. More pedestrians take hold of the sleigh.
CROWD YELLING
You are trying to take Christmas away from us! Liar! Cheat! Crook! Scammer!
HENRY
If you follow me, I show you how you can help.
NEW YORKER
Kid will do anything for followers. Get him!
HENRY
No No it’s the truth. You have to believe me. I have proof.
Henry waves the document. The Reindeer buck and stomp at the surrounding crowd. Fear glows in their eyes. A hand reaches up and grabs Samwise’s vest. He pulls away only to be grappled with by more of the crowd.
SAMWISE
Kid. Get us out of here.
Henry jumps down from the sleigh into the angry mob. He pulls at hands and arms holding the reins trying to free the reindeer. Their grips too strong. Their numbers too many. Their motivation too bleak.
HENRY
Get away from here! Don’t you understand? Leave them alone.
Behind him on the sleigh Samwise has his own problems, trying to fight off the crowd trying to pull him off the sleigh. Some of the crowd reached the cargo hold, taking the cartons for themselves.
Henry’s pushed and shoved by the crowd towards the front of the reindeer team. The current is too strong. Once again he can’t breath. He falls to the ground. Nobody notices or cares. He’s enveloped in darkness of the bodies above him.
HENRY
(failing) You have to believe me.
And then silence.
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Lisa’s Act 3 Turning Point
A strong turning point is what will make the story satisfying to the audience. If nothing changes, no one cares and what’s the point? So in this story, the turning point is literally life or death.
The turning point in my story happens after Mayla sets fire to the house with her kids inside. This give David the chance to save the kids and make up for his mistakes in his past life. Seen as a hero dog now, David gets to live the last years of his life with his children.
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