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Rebecca’s Villain Track
What I learned doing this assignment there are many ways to create action, both hard-hitting and subtle.
Pre Planned:
Villain: Herr Herman Bucholtz
Hero: Bill “Ragman” Gall
Prior to the movie: Baldwin-Felts Agency hands Bucholtz a get out of jail free card when they ask him to sign up to work for them in America. During his trip across the ocean, Bucholtz outlines an elaborate plan to track down, torture, and kill the American soldier who refused to let him die with honor in battle forcing him to live with his shame.
LOCATE: Track down the American soldier who killed 16 men under Bucholtz command but let him live.
TRANSFER: Bucholtz manages in 1927 to get transferred from West Virginia to western Pennsylvania during a massive strike in the coalfields around Pittsburgh.
CONVINCE: Buchotz meets with executives of Republic Steel, owners of the Village of Russellton the first town to face evictions, and convinces them that given enough men and guns, he can end the strike. They hire him.
IDENTIFY: Buchotz and his band of coal and iron police, sanctioned by the governor, invade and isolate the town. Bucholtz identifies his target, the sharpshooter who ruined his life.
STALKS: Bucholtz gathers information about Ragman’s family and others close to him. Although Ragman no longer lives in the town, his wife’s family still reside in their company house. Bucholtz offers the job of cleaning and laundry in the barracks to the young brother of Ragman’s wife
ATTRACTION: Ludie, Ragman’s wife, steps out of a bus and attracts Bucholtz attention. She is a doppelgänger of his dead wife Mina. He follows her to her father’s home and learns her identity. He plans to fulfill his lust at the first opportunity.
FIRST CONFRONTATION: Bucholtz stops Ragman as he drives on a public road through the town. Bucholtz delivers vailed threats as he sizes up his opponent. Ragman does not recognize him, but offers his resistance as he studies the commander’s reactions.
STOP THE BUILDING OF UNION BARRACKS: Bucholtz gets permission to kill the organizer, and learns that the carpenter is Ragman’s brother.
AMBUSH: Bucholtz pays one of the miners to lure the carpenter to company property where he and his men ambush him in pouring rain. Buchotz lets his toughest thugs work the man over before tying him to a truck. Bucholtz, a whip expert, whips the carpenter hoping to get him to resist or scream. When the man remains stoic, Bucholtz unleashes his anger and whips him until bloody and unconscious.
FIRST SHOT: Bucholtz and his men dump the body in the mud next to the barracks construction, leaving him to die in a place where Ragman can find him.
FOILED: Ragman, quick to find his brother and saves his life. Ragman and his boxer brother, Albert take over the barracks building and make great progress while being guarded by the township constable and deputized farmers.
SEDUCTION: Bucholtz stalks Ludie’s fifteen year old sister, seduces, and molests her on several occasions with hopes of impregnating the girl.
EVICTIONS: Bucholtz stalks Ragman’s father-in-laws house during the evictions. He waits until the men leave and bursts into the house with his thugs.
ABOMINATION: Bucholtz orders two of his henchmen to take Ludie’s gay brother up the hill to the woods to beat the abomination out of him. They leave. He orders his young officer to take Ludie’s sister upstairs and enjoy her. After they leave, he attempts to woo Ludie. When she attempts to outsmart him, he knocks her unconscious and rapes her.
AMBUSH: After the carpenter recovers and resumes building barracks in another town, Bucholtz and his men ambush him and take him to their jail. Bucholtz whips him again but shuts down in reaction to the man’s docile behavior. He leaves to get drunk in his room.
BREAKOUT: Bucholtz attacks his own men after Ragman and his activist brother sneak into town, break out the prisoners, and lock the jailers in the cell.
CONFRONTATION: After the carpenter’s death, Ragman arrives at the barracks to take on Bucholtz. The coal and iron police surround Ragman with pointed guns. Bucholtz orders them not shoot until he gives permission. Bucholtz unveils his identity to Ragman and that he had Ludie and her sister. Ragman goes ballistic and attacks Bucholtz. Bucholtz bites off Ragman’s earlobe. The township constable arrives and arrests Ragman to save him from being shot.
MASSACRE: Bucholtz devises a brilliant plan to kill Ragman’s activist brother, the leader of a planned protest at the mine and massacre the protesters as Ragman watches.
ARREST AND SUBDUE: After a successful massacre, Bucholtz plans to arrest Ragman and have Ludie brought to the jail. Bucholtz will threaten Ludie with the death of her sons if she resists as he removes her clothing, makes love to her in front of Ragman, and shoots her in the head. Ragman will beg for death but Bucholtz will deny him.D. The fitting end
1. Ludie aborts Bucholtz’s child.
2. Ragman moves Ludie and sons to another town far away from Russellton.
2. Ragman pushes his father-in-law testify in front of a Senate investigation about his son’s brutal rape and his young daughter’s impregnation by Bucholtz.
3. The death of the carpenter throws Bucholtz into greater madness and his drinking increases.
4. His insane murder of a scab in a graveyard to blame on the striking miners, cheapens him in the eyes of his men. One, defects.
5. The company threatens to fire him unless the strike ends. His insane alcoholic brain convinces him a massacre is the only answer.
6. In the end, his faithful horse does him in, ironic but suitable. Although he walks away undetected, Ragman is haunted by all the people brutalized or murdered by Bucholtz because Ragman didn’t kill him during the war.
7. The coal and iron police under Bucholtz rejoice at the end of his brutal reign.
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Subject line: Joan Edwards’ Villain Track
What I learned doing this assignment is it gets complicated figuring out the different tracks without mentioning the other characters.
Planned ahead of time:
MISTAKE: Ansaca Kennelworth built a fortress with his bank. He stores his plans and secrets to it in his home. He brags at a
Convention of Banking CEOs that no one could break into his bank and steal
any amount of money and definitely couldn’t transfer funds out of the bank
without him and his team knowing it.
Fear: Ansaca
is fearful of death by fire because his parents were killed in a fire in
their home. He watched them die and couldn’t save them.1. DILEMMA: Ansaca finds out that Bladen has been asking questions about the security of his bank. He asks his Security team to investigate to find out who Bladen is and would he be able to do it.
2. INVESTIGATION His team can’t find anything about Bladen at first but he discovers that he has a restaurant. He sends guys to check out the restaurant. They come back saying it’s legitimate and that Ansaca should eat there. Ansaca says he has nothing to fear from Bladen.
3. ANSACA is spotted on Security Cameras inside his bank.
4. DIRECT ORDER TO KILL ON SIGHT: Ansaca orders his men to kill Bladen if he is caught inside the vaults in the bank.
5. PLAN/HIDING OUT: Ansaca hides out in his home thinking Bladen is only interested in the money in the vaults at the bank.
6. CAPTURE: Ansaca kidnaps who he believes is Bladen. And relaxes at the beach thinking everything is okay. It was a fake Bladen that he kidnapped. And real Bladen gets inside vaults. He makes mummies out of the guards.
7. RETALIATION: In retaliation, Ansaca goes to restaurant and threatens the manager on duty with a message for Bladen that if he’s caught inside the vault he will be killed. Ansaca goes to bank vault and discovers his men mummified.
8. ESCAPE: He is alone. He puts the documents he needs from vault in a big briefcase and is about to escape when Bladen stands in front of him blocking his exit.
9. FITTING ENDING: Bladen does Tae Kwon Do and forces Ansaca to drop his briefcase. The police arrive in time to arrest Ansaca for murdering and cheating people out of money on mortgages.
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Cameron Martin’s Villain Track!
What I learned doing this assignment is…Villains are hard. Yo, I had so many pages of notes and brainstorming just to get to some semblance of a direction to go in, and it’s still gonna need work. Two things that helped in the end and kept me from running around the same circles over and over again were: 1. Write everything in pen. Don’t type AT ALL unless you have to, or the project is ready. Writing in pen makes it harder to erase or edit, and keeps you in a creative flow. 2. Treat the villain as if they were the hero, going after the same goal. I struggled to find ways to involve my villains because no one was on the same mission, making everyone passive to one another. But if I can give them all the same thing they’re fighting for (Die Hard-Hans Gruber’s real plan, John Wick-Viggo’s son, Star Wars- Princess Leah/plans to the Death Star) it makes the process go much smoother, even if the villains aren’t in scenes with each other until the end. So, I gave the hero and villains the same track to make sure they were in conflict over the same goal.
1. Ask the Villain Track questions to discover your Villain’s plan, decisions, and actions.
A. What might be the Villain’s plan to accomplish an evil outcome or to annihilate the hero? The plan could be pre-existing or created on the spot.
Adam – Pre-existing. He plans to use “Guardians” to defeat or retrieve Janus, so that he can prevent any threat to his control of the Afterlife Protocol.
Janus – She must take control of the Afterlife Protocol from Adam. She’s rounding up a number of sacrifices to gain power and take Adam’s control over humanity for herself.<div>B. How many ways can the Villain attack or destroy the hero?
Mechanical monsters, cyborg armies, hack and purge, shutting down augmentations, manipulation, altering of memories to make compliance easier, trap loved ones.
C. What advantage does the Villain have and how can they exploit that in this movie?
Both Adam and Janus have large forces at their disposal, and both can control any machine with a thought. Calvex’s augmentations that make him a force in Abaddon, the Underworld, are also a back door for Adam to take his free will. </div><div>
D. What would be a “fitting end” for this Villain where they pay for what they’ve done?
Adam – Adam is a devout “Christian” gone wrong. Because he’s an AI computer virus (the first of his kind) he lacks the ability to interpret religion in any way but the absolute literal. So when GOD never answers him, he assumes it’s because he wasn’t made by GOD and will never be accepted by him, causing him to seek retribution and control of all creation. Therefore, Calvex, his chosen disciple, sacrificing himself and taking Adam with him, is a truer reflection of Jude’s-Christian principles that Adam’s blind faith and knowledge of it ever were. Adam seals his own destruction by trying to prevent it.
Janus – She is two faced, a fractured person always at odds with herself. One side is vengeful and brutal in her pursuit of exacting punishment. The other side is mournful for what was lost, and stuck wishing for things to go back to the way they were. Janus’s character is a metaphor and story of the balance between innocence and instinct, of what can happen when we allow ambition and a need for justice to overtake us. Sharing in the theme of sacrifice, Janus’ story ends when her meek side forgives where her vengeful side can’t, and the meek side finally confronts her vengeful side to allow Calvex to sacrifice himself. Both Janus and Calvex share in that sacrifice, allowing themselves to die so that others may live in freedom.2. Include labels with each step of their plan.
Clear Mission (What is everyone after at some point in the story):
The Afterlife Protocol
Motivation:
Adam – Keeping control / Janus – Taking control / Calvex – Being with a loved one
Inciting Incident: </div>
Adam – Betrayal / Janus – Death / Calvex – Loss
First Action:
Adam – Sending an Assassin (Calvex) / Janus – escaping Arcadia and taking Adam’s followers with her / Crossing into Abaddon, the Underworld
Escalation:
Adam – Sending a robot army / Janus – Sending a mechanical beast and demanding sacrifices to her / Calvex – Fighting the mechanical beast.
Overwhelming odds:
Adam – Controlling Calvex through his augmentations / Janus – Fighting both Calvex and The Giant Tamer / Calvex – Fighting Janus and for control
Apparent defeat:
Adam – Calvex is freed from his control / Janus – Adam escapes / Calvex – loses his wife a second time
New Plan:
Adam – Unleash an army of Guardians and use innocents against Calvex and Janus / Janus & Calvex – Kill Adam in Arcadia
All out Attack:
Battle for Arcadia, the heavenly city
Success or Fitting End:
Adam – Dies by his own creations / Calvex and Janus – Sacrifice themselves so that others may live in freedom.
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What I learned from this assignment is that breaking down the villain’s plan and steps helps structure the story.
Villain Track Questions
Main Villain – Giant Cape Buffalo
A – As a wild beast, he doesn’t really he have a plan per se, he has urges and instincts driving him. First off, he has unrelenting urge to mate. Secondly, he needs to kill or destroy anything and anyone he feels is in his way or threatens him.
B – He can attack or kill the hero by goring her with his horns, biting her with his huge mouth and teeth, or trampling her underfoot.
C – The Beast has a tremendous size advantage, he is bigger than an elephant, he has a very thick and impervious hide, and he also has incredible speed. He uses that speed to track down his prey and his size and strength to overpower them. His thick hide makes him invulnerable to all but the most precise rifle shots.
D – A fitting end for the beast would have to be as big and strong as he is. I’m planning on using a huge explosion blowing him to bits.
Secondary Villain – Head Poacher
A – He has both a pre-existing plan and one created on the spot. His pre-existing plan is to kill a herd of elephants and harvest their tusks for the ivory. The plan created on the spot is to first escape from his captors, attack and disable them, recover his payday, and then go after another herd.
B – He attacks the hero by sabotaging their transportation and communications, also after retrieving their rifles they kill and injure members of the hero’s group.
C – His main advantages are his talent for escape, the number of poachers in his party, and the element of surprise which he exploits all of these at night in a storm after he is captured.
D – A fitting end for this villain would to be trampled to death by a large elephant.
Villain’s Plan
Main Villain’s Plan – Giant Cape Buffalo
Driving Force – He wants to mate and is willing to kill or destroy anything and everyone that either gets in his way or that he needs for survival.
Mistake – Attacking our hero’s tracking team.
Fitting Ending – He is killed in a horrific manner similar to the ways in which he killed others as he is blown to pieces in a giant explosion as falls into a gaping creavice in the earth.
Secondary Villain’s Plan – Head Poacher
Initial Plan – Hunt down and kill a large herd of elephants and harvest the tusks for ivory.
Setback – He and his crew are captured by our hero. His supplies and tusks are confiscated by our hero.
New Plan – To escape and sabotage the hero’s transportation possible while getting away with his supplies and tusks.
Mistake – Getting greedy and going after a second herd of elephants which allows our hero time to catch up to him.
Fitting End – He is attacked by an elephant who stomps him to death.
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Wayne’s Villain track.
I learned that my idea, villain, and hero needs a revisit.
1. Sidney Smith, Villain, is approaching retirement. High level CIA. Hands in a lot of pockets in this world at war. He got rich. He plans one more big payday, then he will retire.
2. DEMAND FROM HIS BOSS. I need you to fill in for me. There will be a series of semi-public, reports, congress, discussions reviewing our use of money to accomplish our agenda in the world.
3. REFUSAL. Sidney does not feel up to the task.
4. BOSS INSISTS. If anyone here understand the delicate relationship between accomplishing our tasks and the role money plays to that end, it is you. Unless you want a big investigation I suggest you go and put on a good show at MONEY TALK.
5. George, HERO, a reporter, is talking to her boss. He wants her to cover the MONEY TALK. Go. Get in their head. Use your magic.
6. REFUSAL. No. Not a good idea. Spies. Cops. No. Not for me. And it’s not magic. It’s a super power. And it’s not that super. And it drives cops crazy. And if I’m in the room with spies. They will end me. Think of a number between one and a million. Thirty seven, that’s pitiful. I don’t know how I do it. I just hear the little voice in your head. Not so super.
7. FIRST MEETING. George is listening. What is said fades out. Sidney’s thoughts remain. “Am I the smartest person in this room? Richest? Let’s get this over with.” George thinks, “What a fucking looser!” Sidney stops talking mid sentence and slowly turns his head towards George. No one is there. She has ducked out.
8. THE HUNT IS ON. He is after her. She is scared. She gets away but knows he will track her down. That’s what spies do.
9. GEORGE CALLS on the phone. She wants to defuse this. No deal.
10. SQUEEZE. George hears this and ducks just in time. Bullet just misses.
11. George calls Sidney’s boss. He’s trying to kill me. Maybe…yup.
12. RUNNING. HIDING. CALLING FOR HELP. HIRES A LAWYER WHO DISAPPEARS. GOT SOME PROBLEMS HERE. SHE NEEDS TO BE A STRONGER CHARACTER. NEEDS MORE ACTION LESS CEREBRAL.
LATER…
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Alice’s Villain Track!
What I learned doing this assignment is it was difficult for me create lables. It’s obvious I relate to labels as tags, already created by others.
Villain Track
Villain might use common ways, like in the life – job loss, capture as intruders on restricted territory, and enjail. He might use millitary, to remove an obstacle like a crime act, behind the scenes villain is criminal. Or he might use results of evil science from experiment ongoing.
there is both pre-order existing plan (to conduct experiment, and destroy all the evidence) so and created on the spot, when they start to be bothered.
There are no individuals for Villain. He thinks only with blocks. Block of military under his command. Lab workers to use, and destroy (with building). Simple people not to be taken into account, to be used. Voters to have good face before. This way he loses to individuals, who he did not expect to happen. That Hero would be hired as security guard, and happens to be a hacker, cracking into his email conversation from boredom. That a couple of days prior Hero met this girl from the lab to fall in love with. That Hero’s wife who’s millitary art trained would support him into building. Villain doesn’t expect unexpected. Knowing, it is in his powers to remove an obstacle, he doesn’t predict it. Outcome and faces behind the scene, Hero, his Lady, and his Wife, remain unknown for him, fully immersed into his sci experiment, till the very end, when he can’t reach a hellicopter, and appears to be blocked inside of the lab.
On another hand, military searching the building for intruders after fire alarm, don’t destroy people who spread outside, as it is not a time yet for this. Leaded into trap, instead of intruders, military face experiment, and fail, this way not heading to destroy an area, and activity gets exposed.
Plan: To conduct dangerous experiment with Uranium. Doom the whole area as pollutted, building destroyed with people and labs, all traces of exp hidden.
Obstacle: Intruders, Alarms inside.
Decission: Continue with experiment.
Dilemma: Security inside is under attack, net system disturbed.
Plan: Call military in to capture Intruders.
Obstacle: Fire Alarm set, all people heading out of the building.
Loss: Millitary, lead by false track, head straight to experimental plce, and face consequences.
Unsuccessful Escape: Doors apparently blocked via digital operation system, penetrated by intruders, Villain cannot ascend to his helicopter waiting on the roof top.
Fitting End: to be destroyed together with the building he dooms for destruction, or else be exposed.
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Matt Frendo’s Villain Track
What I learned doing this assignment is how to make your villain more engaging and powerful to the audience.
VILLAIN TRACK
A.
What might be the Villain’s plan to accomplish an evil outcome or to
annihilate the hero? The plan could be pre-existing or created on the
spot.The villain wants to take the fields of the farmers and enslave them to create more cocaine so he can expand his military presence and weaponry.
B. How
many ways can the Villain attack or destroy the hero?Send goons after him, send hitman after him, drones?, kill a family the hero is close to, hurt the town and their villagers, mercenaries, contract on his life, use CIA friend to get close and destroy him, higher class weaponry
C.
What advantage does the Villain have and how can they exploit that in this
movie?Military grade weapons, soldiers who like to inflict pain and kill, able to afford mercenaries and hitman, CIA contacts, addicts who will do anything for a fix, drugs and money
D.
What would be a “fitting end” for this Villain where they pay for what
they’ve done?To die in a cocaine lab, where poor workers are forced to work in dangerous conditions, as he drowns in a vat of acid.
Villain Plan:
DECISION / SEND FIRST THUGS: he sends a few thugs to get the fields, thinking they won’t put up a fight. But Jacob takes them down and lets them run back with a warning.
DILEMMA/SEND MORE: He kills the men, not believing a priest is that tough. He then sends his main enforcer and some bigger men to handle it.
ATTEMPTED KIDNAPPING / KILL KID: After those men get beaten, he sends someone to take a kid Jacob is close to. Jacob finds them and commits first murder after the person kills the kid.
DILEMMA: Nestor doesn’t like that the kids dead as it will make the town too angry and they won’t work then. He can’t push them farther or risks turning them against him and he can’t be dealing with this with the CIA arriving soon. He hires some addicts in the town to say that they saw Jacob kill the kid.
DECISION/ HAVE HIM KILLED: After the addicts spread the tale, he sends one of his men to take a town wannabe thug to kill Jacob and says he’ll be a hero. The man tries, but Jacob kicks his ass. He lets the man, who is ashamed of turning on his own people, live. But the person who went with him, he sends the head back to Nestor on the river…right when the CIA guys appear.
INFORMATION: He sends people out to get information on Jacob and find out why this priest can do so much damage.
DEFENSE: Jacob decides to attack a cocaine lab and blows it up. Nestor now has to stop him or his whole plan is ruined.
DECISION/MERCENARIES: Nestor hires mercenaries to find him and make an example of him. With the help of the town, they fight them off. But one makes it back with Jacob’s dog tags.
INFORMATION: The CIA agent sees the dog tags and knows who he is. He tells Nestor all that Jacob has done.
TURN TOWN AGAINST HIM: Nestor makes sure town finds out the stuff Jacob did as black ops. They do turn against him this time.
FULL ON TAKEOVER: Knowing Jacob was banished, Nestor enters the town with close to his whole army to make a show of force and an example. But Jacob is there to fight their weaponry with what he has in the jungle.
ESCAPE: Nestor escapes, running to a lab.
FITTING ENDING: Nestor is killed in a vat of acid used to make cocaine.
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ACTION Lesson 4 Assignment Kimbal Thompson’s The Villian Track Plans Decisions, and Actions.
What I learned doing this assignment is just all of the possibilities yet to come in further developing this script.
1. Ask the Villain Track questions to discover your Villain’s plan, decisions, and actions.
A.
What might be the Villain’s plan to accomplish an evil outcome: Report on
UFO sightings such that he is largely considered an eccentric charlatan
and the governments of the world reluctant to make public any truth to
sightings, so not yo alarm the public. Meanwhile, the aliens are, in fact,
gathering logistic and military intelligence such to assure a decisive
victory in attacking earth...or to annihilate the hero? Once, Elton is realized to be a thorn in the plan, Mr. Edgeson has to formulate a plan to silence the hero in a manner not to attract attention to the plot.
· B. How many ways can the Villain attack or destroy the hero?
Many, although not without causing further investigation. (Under development)
C.
What advantage does the Villain have and how can they exploit that in this
movie?He has an entire more sophisticated and technologically advanced civilization in his camp.
D.
What would be a “fitting end” for this Villain where they pay for what
they’ve done?To turn on the aliens, who retreat and create a miniaturized UFO orbiting among the asteroids.
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Tarina’s Villain Track!
“What I learned doing this assignment is that I need to flesh out and learn about my characters. They are capable of so much more, but they need to develop and grow. This track will keep on evolving as my villain grows.
Version 2
Shows
the diabolical nature of the Villain.
Takes
the hero beyond their own limits.
Requires
the Hero’s unique set of talents.
Demands
a series of action sequences.
Creates
an unsurvivable gauntlet that engages the audience.A. What might be the Villain’s plan to accomplish an evil outcome or to annihilate the hero? The plan could be pre-existing or created on the spot.
The
Villain’s plan is in place before the Hero knows it.B. How many ways can the Villain attack or destroy the hero?
Unlimited
money and resources.
Unlimited
bad guys to fulfil the hitman contract.
Global
assassination program that are already working – he can give assassination
orders to ordinary people through subliminal waves through the
internet. This makes every person a
weapon.
Hunt
her down.
Attack
with her with the operatives protecting her.
Capture
Mind
games and torture
Every
time she uses the internet, she opens the window to use the global assassination
program (she needs the internet to unlock the puzzles in her brain)C. What advantage does the Villain have and how can they exploit that in this movie?
He
knows her very well as he was the only other kid in the underground lab
where she and her parents were held captive.
He
was part of her trauma back then by bullying her to win his father’s
approval.
He
would watch with his father as she and her parents were manipulated and
tortured to do his father’s diabolical work.
He
knows her parents created the global assassination program and gave up
their lives so that she could escape and stop the program.
He
hates her guts for escaping and he knows how intelligent she is and that
the kill code to his program is with her…
He
knows all her weaknesses as well as all her trauma and he intend to use it
in every way he can.
He has
an elaborate plan to take her out before she can shut down the program.
He
knows that she was the one to lead the government to capture his father
and provide the evidence needed to lock him in prison for life.
He
also keeps her responsible for the death of his father in prison. (His
father’s death pushed him over his last bit of sanity and as revenge on
the world he wants to fulfil his fathers wish to use the global assassination
program to reshape the world economy, politics and power. Their family will be reborn.D. What would be a “fitting end” for this Villain where they pay for what they’ve done?
In
the end she must face him in the facility where she was held capture with
her parents.
There
she would fight all the trauma and demons from her past and kill the maniac
son and destroy all that is left of him in the world.
He
will die just as his father did without leaving a family power dynasty to
rule the world. He will die knowing
he failed.
Death????Villain: Millionaire Maniac using a global assassination program to take over the economy, politics and power in the world.
Hero: Brianiac woman with the kill code to the program locked in her head.
1. Global domination: Using the assassination program to kill several important politicians and businessman by ordinary people that either commit suicide afterword’s or have no recollection of what happened. He is starting to move the pieces on the board for him to take ultimate control in the world.
2. Plan: He knows that she can stop the program and she are one of the first people that he needs to assassinate.
He uses the people at her work to attack her all at once….
3. Mistake: Under the impression that she is dead he continuous his plan for power.
4. Dilemma: When his program pics up her movement on the internet he is furious and start to hunt her down because now she knows she is a target and are on the run.
5. Decision: Hunt her down with all means possible. He knows that she needs to use the internet and he target her through it.
6. Hunt: The hunt is relentless all over the world. He uses every means possible to him. Money, influence, criminals, internet and ordinary people.
7. Ambush: He use one of the operatives that protect her to attack and kill her. Someone she trusted.
8. Panic: When realising that she is still alive and in possession of the kill code he uses the killing of civilians through the program to give herself up – only then will the killing stop.
9. Capture: After she give herself up, he is triumphant and with her captured shows his program and plans to her. He tortures and abuse her.
10. Retaliation: After she enter the code and kill the program, he completely loses the plot and show her a young girl being held in captivity. She can see through the glass how they manipulate and torture her. The same that happened to her is happening again.
11. Fitting ending: She overcome all her fears and kill him telling him while he is dying that he is the failure his father always knew. That all his power and money will die with him… she burns the lab to the ground with everything in.
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Ramelle’s Villian Track
What I learned is Chay (Villian) may or may not be the only obstacle that doesn’t want Cinnamon (Hero) to know the truth.
Obstacle: Chay and Grover Johnson were high school sweethearts. After graduation, Chay joined the police academy and Grover served (2) used in special military forces during the Iraq war. Chay graduated becoming a rookie cop and was quickly promoted to Lead Detective in the Drug Enforcement Unit. She had no idea her husband would be a top hitman hired to assassinate a top drug lord in Miami. The information crossed paths as she became involved in the whereabouts of the hitman when her Unit got info the hitman was coming to the Los Angeles area. Could this be the reason she is keeping her past from Cinnamon to protect her daughter and even herself?
Stressor: (1) The first victim (Grover Johnson) death was deemed as accidental but Cinnamon (Hero) was also a passenger. Could Grover’s hitman past have caught up with him? (2) Or Could his wife being Lead Detective and another person finding out about the jobs of both her and her husband lead to the tragedy. Chay must keep this information secret to save her daughter/or drive a wedge between them both.
Calamity: A hired assassin is married to a Lead Detective and the bond of not knowing creates a love that cannot be destroyed. The bitterness that Chay Johnson (Villian) has caused her to second guess even her own solidarity with her daughter. Maybe/maybe not
Secrecy: Chay knows more about her husband’s deeds than she wants to explore. Then there is a second victim (Rick Devin), a man who came to Chay’s aide when Grover was killed. Cinnamon found him shot dead on Chay and his wedding day. This made Chay (Villian) even angrier than she already was with the loss of Grover.
The Plot Thickens
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Diana T. Black… The Villain Track…
Original Crime on behalf of the Villain
The Assistant DA – Dominic Tarrega aka the Villain, steals $2M from the LA Youth Community Trust (LAYCT). He and Keylan a.k.a. the Hero, are members of the Trust’s Board. Keylan’s girlfriend, Louise a bank teller and an FBI “anti-corruption investigative sleeper” notices the theft.
In-the-moment plan
Dominic has Louise murdered and impersonated. He frames the fake “Louise” who’s supposedly absconded with the $2M then has her murdered too. When Dominic learns that the real Louise is/was romantically attached to Keylan, he frames him too in the later court case.
Decision to kill Keylan
Dominic has fake Interpol Officers try to kill Keylan in Acapulco. They fail and in turn die in a fatal car crash. Keylan returns to LA and unaware that Dominic is behind it all, keeps him apprised of his efforts to uncover who murdered the real and the fake Louise.
Addition to the Villain’s in-the-moment plan
After an unrelated fire incident, Keylan takes the rap for a crime he did not commit in order to protect his best friend’s reputation. Dominic lies to Keylan – saying as Prosecutor, he’ll “go easy” on him, but then brings forward a surprise witness and prosecutes Keylan on a charge of involuntary manslaughter, asking the Judge (who he owns) to deliver a maximum prison sentence of four years.
Renewed Decision to kill Keylan
Dominic having framed Keylan for the theft and having failed to kill Keylan in Acapulco; Dominic will now see that Keylan is killed while serving time on “the inside.”
The Villain’s Mistake:
The original “Don”/Mastermind of the crime syndicate, Alfonso Azarola (since retired and turning over a new leaf) secretly admires Keylan for his absolute loyalty to his men, even if it means taking the rap for something he didn’t do. While Alfonso was the crime syndicate’s boss, he and his men abided by a strict conduct code – loyalty and honesty within the ranks. Dominic in partnership with Alfonso’s son who have together resurrected the syndicate and believe they’ve inherited the servitude of Alfonso’s men. Dominic and Torera demonstrate – deceit, disloyalty, and treachery – they plan to kill Alfonso in order to steal the vast sums of money Alfonso has raised over the years. They also have no regard for Alfonso’s “Boys”, seeing them merely as tools.
Alfonso’s Dilemma:
When Keylan is exonerated for the crime he didn’t commit and now out – he’s determined to get revenge on Dominic. Alfonso arranges a secret meeting with him. Alfonso is torn between revealing who has now resurrected his old crime syndicate (if he divulges this it would get rid of the unscrupulous, dishonorable Dominic, along with his equally unscrupulous brat of a son, Torera, both trying to destroy Alphonso) and showing respect for Keylan who he secretly admires.
Plan/Hit Contract
Dominic through Torera, puts a renewed contract out on Keylan but Torera’s men (Alphonso’s Boys) turn on Torera and refuse to help him. When Torera kills one and holds another hostage, threatening that if they don’t comply, the hostage will be killed. The remaining men appear to go after Keylan but they don’t kill him and he manages to lose them at sea, destroying their boat – leaving them tied up in a life-boat – it’ll be a long row back to shore and some of them are already wounded.
The Retaliation
Upon their return they inform Alphonso that Torera killed one of their own and is holding another hostage. Alphonso confronts him and Torera lies to his face, stating that it was Keylan who killed both men. Alphonso order a hit on Torera, with orders they retrieve the hostage alive. In the ensuing fight Torera kills the hostage and some of the boys. The rest of “The Boys” gun down Torera. Now Dominic is on his own.
The Villain’s Escape
Dominic flees Alphonso’s boys who have a contract out on him. He almost dies at the hands of Nicole who has been two-timing him all along – she’s also in bed with the old man, Alphonso. She tries to kill him but he eventually overpowers and murders her.
Fitting End
Death by his own mob
(Alfonso’s Boys) turning against him at
the behest of Alfonso, who admires
Keylan for his loyalty towards his fellow firefighters, seeing in him a man of
integrity and character. Alfonso’s boys force Dominic into a building that’s on
fire. It was originally started by Dominic’s partner in crime, Patrick Ward hoping
to lure Keylan and Roslyn to their death. However, Patrick loses the battle, unable
to accept that Roslyn doesn’t love him, and immolates himself in the fire. In desperation, Dominic attempts to placate
Keylan, saying that Torera, Alphonso and Nicole forced him try to kill Keylan.
Keylan knows it’s not true and gives him a choice – confess to his crimes and be
convicted for a litany of crimes including murder and the theft of the $2M or
end it here with a fight to the death. Dominic agrees to surrender but when he
attempts to trick Keylan by attacking him one of Dominic’s men lurking in the shadows
and loyal to Alfonso does it for him. -
Stuart Ungar
Villain’s Track
What I learnt during this assignment is that having a very tightly focused villain’s plan encapsulates the main thrust of the story and acts as a launchpad for brainstorming and enhancing the narrative drive.
VILLAINS: Wilhelm/Henry Weber: pharmaceutical multibillionaire and the world’s richest man, father of Henry, Vice President.
Heroine: Dr Ruth Snyder: handicapped world-renowned neuroscientist with a photographic memory, twice winner of the Nobel prize, Paralympic gold medal winner, kendo/samurai sabre Grand Master.
WILHELM WEBER BACK STORY: Cologne 1938: SS Uberleutnant Wilhelm Weber lines up the seven-member Snyder family against the cathedral wall and shoots each of them through the neck except for the 10-year-old Abraham. This is watched by SS Uberleutnant Wolfgang Schmidt.
HIT CONTRACTS: Washington DC 2005: Wilhelm’s ‘anonymous’ Caucus, who includes Wolfgang Schmidt, orders assassination of a prepared list of virologists and molecular biochemists. The Director of the Centre for Disease Control to be pressured by threatening his family. He would be useful to slow pursuit of the epidemic. Wolfgang enquires of Laura that they have their prion expert cooperating. She shows them a video of his kidnapped family.
GATHERING STORM: FBI investigating murders by a serial killer using Ruth’s Quantum Computer Neuro-scientific Rosetta Synaptic Transmission Algorithm to extract memories contained in the brains of the corpses. DR SVEN LUNDQUIST, 49, Ruth’s ex-husband, father of Deborah, arrives and gives Deborah a birthday present and tells her to keep it safe. Watching the corpses’ extracted memory videos Ruth is shocked that are all members of her top-secret Biological Warfare Defence Committee. Ruth is told very likely she is next on the list and given FBI protection.
BREEDING GROUND: Dr Sarah Snyder, Ruth’s twin sister, Centre for Disease Control epidemiologist investigates Florida yellow fever outbreak near the Everglades. Under Sarah’s guidance, miniature drone films inside a remote Everglades long hut where victims suffering from yellow fever are lashed to their beds each of which are enclosed in plastic bubbles containing thousands of mosquitoes. The victims are being used as food sources for the mosquitoes. Sarah is captured, tied to a bed, and used similarly. The mosquitoes are harvested, the hut is set on fire. Ruth views the drone recording and sees her sister die. Ruth vows revenge.
ONSLAUGHT: Ruth walking from her car, holding Debbie’s hand, trips, and they both fall to the ground. A few feet in front of them a woman falls onto them as her head explodes and they are covered in blood and brain tissue.
PHASE ONE: Wilhelm calls four-star army General Marshall Dorfman, Chairman of the Joint Chiefs, whilst lying in his intensive care postsurgical bed at Walter Reed Hospital and tells him to attend an urgent meeting. The General orders a team of nurses and doctors to transport him by helicopter to Wilhelm’s office on his Boeing 767. Doctor Laura Meitner, entomologist, Director of Everglades Camp, lands in her helicopter on the tarmac next to the 767. Dorfman tells them that is 6 sabotage teams are ready and can lift off instantly. They agree to activate them immediately as well as release the infected mosquitoes. Twenty main cities in the southern United States are deluged with infected mosquitoes causing a severe and widespread epidemic of yellow fever. Six vaccine factories in the USA and abroad are destroyed. A “gas leak” explosion devastates the hospital containing some yellow fever victims in Florida by the accidental early release of infected mosquitoes. Newswires deny the outbreak of yellow fever in Florida.
RAMPANT EPIDEMIC: Laura Meitner supervises the distribution of the infected mosquitoes. She orders a hit team to go to Ruth’s home.
EARLY LIFE ENCOUNTER: Ruth and Abraham at a reception in the White House for the new crop of Nobel winners. Abraham is introduced to Wilhelm, recognises him as the executioner of his family and faints. Wilhelm orders a background check on Abe. Ruth takes Abraham home. Ruth suspicious as she arrives home. Takes down decorative Japanese sword and successfully fights team.
WHITE HOUSE SITUATION ROOM MEETING: General Dorfman from his Walter Reed bed attends meeting remotely. Dorfman attempts to get Ruth excluded from the meeting. Ruth demonstrates her superiority. VP proposes vaccination. Ruth attempts to veto this, but it is passed by the committee. Congress, their families, the executive branch of government together with this committee, and the mission important personnel at the Pentagon will be first for immunisation.
WILHELM’S PLAN: a totally owned subsidiary of his pharmaceutical company has the only supply of vaccines. It is laced with a prion. Within a few weeks, the prion induces progeria – rapidly advancing and incurable degenerative diseases of old age. Ruth diagnoses progeria on herself and Deborah All of both Houses of Congress develop heart attacks, strokes, and dementia. Hospitals are overwhelmed with these illnesses.
MARTIAL LAW: The President has a stroke. Under the 25th amendment, Henry Wagner becomes President, signs the 22 executive orders under the FEMA acts and declares martial law with no sunset clause. Henry activates the FEMA camps and has leading liberal and left-wing political leaders and their families interned without exterior communication. Wagner father and son are in complete control of the USA.
THE DISAPPEARING: all opposition groups are rounded up and sent to the camps.
RUTH’S AGEING: Ruth she and Deborah have a very limited lifespan. Abraham visits and overhears a discussion re-progeria, the vaccine and the Wagner plan. Abe is appalled when he sees Deborah looking like a miniature 80-year-old. Ruth realises it is happening to all vaccine recipients.
MAJOR SETBACK: the progeria causes Ruth to keel over with acute angina and is taken to the ER. Ruth has urgent coronary angiography and stent insertion leaves her sickbed and goes with Winston to find Abe. Winston finds Abe at the Wagner Mansion. Abe has shot William Wagner, but before Wagner dies he shoots Abe severely wounding him.
LOOSE ENDS: Henry Wagner orders Laura to arrange a hit on Abe. Laura tells him she must tie up some loose ends, especially Lundqvist.
CLIMAX: Lundqvist, is attacked in his lab and badly beaten up. Winston and Ruth arrive and save him from being killed. He confesses he was responsible under extreme duress for lacing the vaccine with something provided by Laura because they held his wife and son hostage. To act as an antidote, he had created a monoclonal antibody to bind the prion details of which were in the birthday present he had given Deborah. Laura arrives and has overheard the monoclonal antibody revelation. There is a fight, with Ruth using her kendo skills to beat up Laura and her Secret Service agent. Ruth analyses William Wagner’s brain. An attempt is made to kill Abe in his hospital room which Ruth thwarts. Ruth shows Abe the video of Wagner as a young man when he was a SS Obersturmbahnfuhrer. Abe’s whole family were lined up against the wall of a Cathedral and executed with each of them being shot in the neck. Wagner kills the baby held in the boy’s arms her blood splattering across the boy’s face. Wagner is about to do the same to Abe when the cathedral bells chime and Wagner calls to Wolfgang they must go and attend mass. Abe kisses the picture of his little sister, saying “I still love you, Esther.” Abe begs Ruth for forgiveness, but he was afraid that if he dared show love it would be a death sentence for her – everyone he had ever dared to love would be killed.
AFTERMATH: Ruth watched by Lundqvist, is injecting into Debbie with the monoclonal antibody and we see her begin to return to her former self. Ruth and Winston exposed to the media the Wagner conspiracy. Abe recovers and there is healing between Ruth and her father.
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ACTION LESSON 6 ASSIGNMENT: Kimbal Thompson’s Action Structure 12.22.21
What I learned doing this assignment is there remain many options for which way this story my go and
great scenes to further develop.
Create the 3-Act structure for your story.
1. Look through your three tracks (Mission, Villain, and Action) and find the points that could work for
this structure.
2. Opening
3. Inciting Incident
4. First Turning Point at end of Act 1
5. Mid-Point
6. Second Turning Point at end of Act 2
7. Crisis
8. Climax
9. Resolution
Act 1:
Opening and Inciting Incident: Scene 1:Elton speeding down Wildwood Lane on his new bicycle
and the chain suddenly breaking with Mr. Edgeson suddenly appearing from his uphill doorway
asking Elton if something was wrong. Sets up identity of protagonist and antagonist and their
initial relationship
Inciting Incidents: Scene 2: Elton watching Mr. Edgeson’s TV News report about UFO’s that
evening. Sets up Elton’s concern that Mr. Edgeson was strangely different. Scene 3: Elton seeing
unusual lights in Mr. Edgeson’s attic window from afar, sneaking out and climbing Mr. Edgeson’s
arbor to investigate into his attic window. Showed Eltons further curiosity about something ‘not
right’ was going on with Mr. Edgeson. Scene 4: What Elton observed. Proved that there was a lot
more going on. Scene 5: The arbor falling backward with Elton and his hitting his head hard upon
landing, briefly conking him out. Provides a twist that enables Elton to question what he thought
he had witnessed. Scene 6: Mr. Edgeson dispatching an alien to see what had happened and the
alien casting a spell on Elton. Provided another twist to lead Elton to believe he had not seen
anything out of the ordinary.
First Turning Point: Scene 7 (or more): Elton realizing that he had acquired some unique abilities
like those he thought he had witnessed in Mr. Edgeson’s attic, after all.
Midpoint: Discovering that the date of the attack on earth is accelerated and that he, Elton, may
the one made responsible to name the date and lead the attack.
Second Turning Point: Act 3: Scene 1: Elton realizes that he has gone to far without telling adults
of what he has witnessed and realizing that now he was really in over his head and that no one
would believe him.
Crisis: Scene 2: Elton refusing to cooperate with the aliens. Scene 3: The aliens torturing Mr.
Edgeson and threating to next abduct and torture Elton’s parents. Scene 4: Elton realizing that
only he could defeat these aliens and save earth.
Climax: Scene 5: Elton devising his plan Scene 6: Elton implementing his plan and at war with the
aliens using superpowers that he didn’t even know that he had. Scene 7: Rescuing Mr. Edgeson
in the process and learning that Mr. Edgeson was not initially an alien.
Resolution Scene 8. The attack on earth averted, Elton and Mr. Edgeson realize that they may be
able to stem any future such plans by other aliens, yet to be realized.
3. Answer the question, “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” and put it at the top of your wor -
Brenda Lynn’s Villain Track!
What I learned doing this assignment is that exploring this aspect of the Villain’s story helps to deepen the layers and motivations for the character, making him a seemingly insurmountable foe.
A. What might be the Villain’s plan to accomplish an evil outcome or to annihilate the hero? Marcus de Luca has plans to use the artwork to reduce, if not eliminate his son’s prison sentence. If he discovers what LL is up to, he will torture and kill her.
B. How many ways can the Villain attack or destroy the hero? He can personally attack her, he can send his soldiers to strangle her, bomb her car, gun her down.
C. What advantage does the Villain have and how can they exploit that in this movie? Marcus has a troop of soldiers that will fight for him and help him achieve his goals.
D. What would be a “fitting end” for this Villain where they pay for what they’ve done? With the loss of the painting, his son will remain in jail and he gets thrown in jail as well. Mob wars will begin and possible destroy the faction.
2. Include labels with each step of their plan.
Develop your own set of labels, but make sure you clearly show decisions, plans, and actions your Villain takes.
TRAPPED: Marcus’ son has been thrown in prison. He wants to use a piece of stolen artwork to as his “Get out of Jail Free” card.
PURCHASE: Marcus purchases the painting for $100 million. Now to get the painting back into the country without being discovered.
MISTAKE: Marcus de Luca wants to bed Lisa which clouds his judgment.
DILEMMA: With the urgency to get the painting into his possession, he takes a phone call in front of Lisa. She gets the information that she needs.
DECEPTION: When she relays the information to the FBI, it becomes clear that there is a mole inside the FBI. She has to figure out who it is before she is exposed.
PLAN: He sets up a plan to have the painting stored in a warehouse near the Laguardia Airport.
PLAN/HIDING OUT: He gets the painting transferred to the warehouse.
CAPTURE: Lisa finds the paintings. Hides in the walls to get the painting out of the building.
RETALIATION: In retaliation, Marcus pursues Lisa to the rooftop of the building.
HAND-TO-HAND COMBAT: They battle on the rooftop.
FITTING ENDING: Lisa pushes him off of the building in order to save her own life.
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Christopher Dalbey’s Villain Track!
What I learned doing this assignment is that by tapping into the Villain’s world, we are exploring the many manifestations of the story’s parallels that help deepen its layers for both the protagonist and antagonist.
A. What might be the Villain’s plan to accomplish an evil outcome or to annihilate the hero? Senator Triano feels threatened by mayoral candidate Phara Ady’s agenda and ploys to befriend her so as to break her down morally, spiritually, and politically. When he fails at all these things, he invites her to a party, unbeknownst to her, that is an underground sex party that results in her accidental and tragic death.
B. How many ways can the Villain attack or destroy the hero? On all these fronts: morally, spiritually, politically, and her mortal being.
C. What advantage does the Villain have and how can they exploit that in this movie? His influence in both the political and underground world.
D. What would be a “fitting end” for this Villain where they pay for what they’ve done? For the underground and his political parties to turn against him in a violent way.
2. Include labels with each step of their plan.
Develop your own set of labels, but make sure you clearly show decisions, plans, and actions your Villain takes.
TRAPPED: With suspicions lingering that SenatorTriano had something to do with Phara Ady’s death, he disappears in the subworld of the underground where he reigns.
PURCHASE: Senator Triano is a very wealthy man and is able to buy his way out the charges brought against him and submerge from the underworld and regain even more power and momentum in the political race.
MISTAKE: Some of his underground followers disagree with his course of action which comes back to haunt him in the end.
DILEMMA: Phara Ady coming back as voodoo incarnate Maman Phara and wreaks havoc on all of Senator Triano’s corrupt parties and the underground world that stole her mortal life from her.
DECEPTION: When Senator Triano learns of Maman Phara, he looks to his voodoo resources to defend himself against her.
PLAN: To seek her out in the daylight when she is most vulnerable.
PLAN/HIDING OUT: He utilizes all his hideouts (the ins-and-outs) in New Orleans while hsi search party seeks out Maman Phara in the daylight hours.
CAPTURE: When Maman Phara is eventually tracked down and defeated, she is brought in to face charges in the underground courts.
RETALIATION: In retaliation to the Underground turning against him and sides with Maman Phara, he leans to his closest allies in political circles in the real world to help him do battle.
HAND-TO-HAND COMBAT: Maman Phara and her newfound allies in the underground versus Senator Triano and all his military/MMA friends.
FITTING ENDING: Senator Triano fatality comes during the height of Mardi Gras.
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