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Jack’s Show’s Relationship Map
Regarding The 100
CLARKE FINN BELLAMY ABBY
SURFACE Friends, then lovers Control competitor Mother
CONFLICT Finn’s girlfriend Raven Compete for Control Clarke mad at mom arrived from Arc of 100 for outing father
SUBTEXT Clarke pretends it doesn’t Clarke’s compassionate Clarke attempts to bother her that Raven has killing of wounded friend hurt mother by arrived shows her strength taking off wrist band
ARC To be determined
RELATIONSHIP MAP FOR CONCEIVED
VICTORIA KAYLA PROFESSOR MATTHEWS GEORGE
SURFACE Friend, lover business associate Lawyer Captain, friend
COMMON Both Professional Business interests Both English women
HISTORY New friend Old Business Assoiciate Lovers in College
CONFLICT Kayla wants Victoria’s Professor steals Victoria’s eggs to prove nature to gain her genes for his vs nurture argument own child and to raise a royal
SUBTEXT Kayla pretends she is Professor pretends he is George uses Victoria’s friend but friend but isn’t Victoria to win isn’t case against Kayla
ARC
Victoria begins Kayla begins as loyal Professor begins as loyal as someone in and turns traitor and turns traitor complete control then becomes helples
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Jack’s Show’s Relationship Map
RELATIONSHIP MAP FOR THE 100
CLARKE’S RELATIONSHIPS WITH FINN
SURFACE – Friend, Lover
COMMON GROUND – Both in the 100
CONFLICT – After becoming lovers, Finns Girlfriend arrives on earth from The Arc
CONFLICT – Jealous of Finn’s girlfriend Raven
SUBTEXT – Clarke pretends she isn’t jealous
ARC – to be determined
CLARKE’S RELATIONSHIPS WITH BELLAMY
SURFACE – Competitor for Control of The 100
COMMON GROUND – one of The 100
CONFLICT – She wants the Arc to save them, He doesn’t want any contact with The Arc
SUBTEXT – She gains his respect when she compassionately kills his friend
ARC – to be determined
CLARKE’S RELATIONSHIP WITH ABBY
SURFACE – Mother
COMMON GROUND – Both want to save The Arc and The 100
SUBTEXT – Clarke tries to hurt her mother by destroying her wristband
ARC – to be determined
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Jack’s RELATIONSHIP MAP FOR SHOW CALLED CONCEIVED
VICTORIA’S RELATIONSHIPS WITH KAYLA
SURFACE – friend, Lover
COMMON GROUND – Both are professional women
CONFLICT – Kayla wants Victoria’s eggs to prove that nurture not nature is most important, and to raise a child with royal blood in the Everglades with the Miccosukee Indians (This ends up as a modern day Tarzan story through the seasons)
HISTORY – Friends, lovers
SUBTEXT – Kayla deceives Victoria by pretending to be her friend but she is really jealous
RELATIONSHIP ARC – Victoria begins as completely in control of Kayla, and in the end is shattered when she finds out her child is not royal blooded at all, but is one-quarter black because the eggs were switched with Kayla’s. Then she changes again when her love for the girl proves to be be a win for Victoria
VICTORIA’S RELATIONSHIPS WITH PROFESSOR MATTHEWS
SURFACE – The professor owns a cryogenics and gene editing lab financed by Victoria’s hedge fund –
COMMON GROUND – they both want the business to succeed
CONFLICT – Professor Matthews steals eggs from Victoria to have his own royal-blooded child
HISTORY – the professor has depended on funding from Victoria for his lab
SUBTEXT – the professor deceives Victoria about her eggs, knowing she is actually going to raise a child from Kayla’s eggs
RELATIONSHIP ARC – Their relationship goes from business associates to enemies
VICTORIA’S RELATIONSHIPS WITH SIR GEORGE
SURFACE – Parents of the child born with the help of a surrogate
COMMON GROUND – Both are English blue bloods
CONFLICT – When they find out their child born is not of royal blood, they have different opinions of what to do
HISTORY – Victoria followed George to Yale and was supposed to marry him, as was planned by their parents, but he cheated on her
SUBTEXT – Sir George uses Kayla’s lawsuit against his sugarcane growing clients as ammunition against Victoria when he wants to abandon emotional support for their child
RELATIONSHIP ARC – From College lovers to college enemies to business associates through Sir George’s law firm to enemies over the raising of their child who isn’t biologically related to them
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What I learned from the assignment is that the Relationship Maps force you to consider all aspects of the characters’ relationships.
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David’s Show Relationship Map
What I learned from this assignment is the importance of nailing down the specifics of your character’s relationships. This will drive conflict and create story lines.
ASSIGNMENT 1: RIVERDALE
ARCHIE & BETTY
Surface: best friends
Common Ground: live next door, grew up together, same age/interests
Conflict: dating wise. Archie thinks Betty is too good for him. Her parents dislike Archie. Conflict when Archie kisses Veronica.
History: (see common ground).
Subtext: They are meant to be together… eventually
Relationship Arc: best friends to possibly a married couple
ASSIGNMENT 2: FALL RUSH
EMILY & DR. ANDREWS
Surface: Enemies, both fighting for control of the house
Common Ground: They both live near campus, her husband teaches there, have seen each other over the years
Conflict: He thinks she’s uneducated, doesn’t respect her, belittles her occupation. She thinks he’s a pompous blowhard who doesn’t have a family. They both think the others’ values are wrong. She’s more carefree, he’s rules the campus with an iron fist
History: The dean hired her husband to teach, given the house to live in. They’ve seen each other at various meetups/parties and he always looks down on her for not finishing college.
Subtext: The dean doesn’t respect her at all
Relationship Arc: hostility to respect.
EMILY & LINDSAY
Surface: Mother and daughter, everything’s fine
Common Ground: Mother/daughter from same husband/father. Emily raised her.
Conflict: Lindsay’s an artsy rebel, thinks her mom is a Stepford wife, doing whatever Steve says. Doesn’t respect her completely for settling for an easy job/life. Thinks her mom is too controlling and too passive. Emily would like to bridge the gap, but doesn’t know how.
History: Mother and daughter. Conflict started when lindsay went to high school and became rebellious.
Subtext: Emily can’t communicate with her daughter; they’ve grown apart.
Relationship Arc: Strained relationship to close, harmonious one.
EMILY & ANNA
Surface: Sorority sisters; Emily’s a mentor/motherly figure to Anna.
Common Ground: same college, same sorority, both kind and sweet, both a bit socially awkward, both have been scorned by men/boys.
Conflict: Anna’s replacing Lindsay as daughter. Anna’s parents don’t like her being in a sorority, especially with a woman twice her age. Anna moves in which causes more conflict. When Steve returns home, conflict over where Anna should live. Generational differences, social media, etc.
History: They met in class when Anna picked up one of Emily’s fliers. She came to rush- the only one- then invited all her geeky friends to join. Anna moves into the house.
Subtext: By mothering Anna, Emily learns how to communicate with Lindsay
Relationship Arc: strangers in a classroom to very close friends/sisters.
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Module 2 Lesson 6 Show Summary
Tracy El Pueblo
What I learned doing this assignment is it was harder than I thought! I’m not sure this summary does what it’s supposed to, but I expect to get better at this.
Antonia Moreno de la Cruz wiley negotiates her predicament as a teenage marriage commodity in the colonial <st1:place w:st=”on”><st1:placetype w:st=”on”>village</st1:placetype> of <st1:placename w:st=”on”>Los Angeles/El Pueblo</st1:placename></st1:place>. She lives in a predominantly male frontier. In 1818, choices in this isolated Spanish province are determined by strict castes of skin color. Antonia is a mixed-race girl, born of a new people dubbed the Californios.
Despite her grandmother being a marriage broker, Antonia manages to escape unions with old widowed ranchers or soldiers she despises. They want a virginal young second wife. Antonia yearns for the impossible — desire. And then in one pivotal year, the impossible happens! Four virile young men, sailing from different corners of the world, end up in El Pueblo.
Two of the men are of the Spanish empire, escaping opposite sides of the war for independence raging across <st1:country-region w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>Mexico</st1:place></st1:country-region>. The young Catholic priest, with a hidden Jewish heritage, supports the insurgency. The elegant, but penniless clerk, is a criollo royalist. The other two strangers, dangerous American pirates, destroy the colonists’ years of backbreaking labor before they are captured — the only time <st1:state w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>California</st1:place></st1:state> is attacked by pirates! All four men upend the teen’s prospects and outlook. But Antonia is willing to break the rules most especially for the blond, blue-eyed, foul-mouthed white Yankee, Joseph Chapman.
This series is based on the true story of the first illegal immigrants in <st1:city w:st=”on”><st1:place w:st=”on”>Los Angeles</st1:place></st1:city>, American pirates. One black. One white. What happened when the brown Spanish villagers allowed these enemy outsiders to stay?
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Module 2 Assignment 6
Jack’s Show Summary
What I learned from this assignment is that having a template for the first page of the pitch bible makes it much easier to get the important information front and center.
1. Choose Summary Format – Highlights of Entire Season
ROUGH DRAFT OF FIRST PAGE
CONCEIVED, a one-hour dramatic series.
SEASON LOGLINE: A royal-blooded wealth fund manager and her American lover freeze their eggs for future fertilization, but the eggs are switched when the lawyer wants to prove her point that nurture, not nature, determines one’s future. However, the owner of the gene-editing and cryogenics lab where the eggs are stored hatches his own plan for their genes.
PILOT LOGLINE: Two professional women from diverse backgrounds freeze their eggs at the cryogenics lab of the world’s leading gene-editing scientist who is also the leader of an ancient Druid cult.
This is the story of the unraveling of the lives of three sets of parents and their children who grow up not knowing who they really are. Two strong female leads of opposite pedigree meet and become lovers. KAYLA HITCH, late 20’s, is an environmental lawyer of mixed race who is all natural, not tech-savvy or good with money. VICTORIA CROMWELL, 30’s, is lilly white, of royal blood, and runs a hedge fund that includes some of the Queen’s wealth, piloting her own Learjet around the world with her copilot and bodyguard CHARLES, 40’s. Kayla wants to halt the emergence of red tide on Florida’s beaches and save the Everglades while Victoria wants to halt the security breaches in her accounts and keep and grow the fund she manages. At the end of the pilot episode, the two women freeze their eggs so that they may have children with surrogate mothers. The antagonist, PROFESSOR MATTHEWS, 50’s, owns the cryogenics and gene-editing lab where the eggs are stored. He hatches a plan to use Victoria’s eggs to create his own royal-blooded child. The one-hour drama pilot is ripe with original ideas concerning the question of what part genes play in determining one’s soul. Nature versus Nurture in the 21st century.
Professor Matthews is a leader of the Druid community in England and is the keeper of the skull of Bran The Blessed, an eighth century king who was killed in Ireland in battle. Because the Druids believe the soul resides in the head, not the heart, his head was brought back to England as protection against invasion, and handed down over the ages. The professor is one of the world’s leading gene editing and embryo enhancement specialists and believes he can use DNA from the skull to enhance his own genes, along with Victoria’s, which he intends to secretly use, to create a great royal-blooded Druid leader.
However, because Kayla believes she was shunned by Victoria’s parents because of her race, she switches the nametags on the eggs so that Victoria and Professor Matthews will actually be raising two children whose biological mother is Kayla and Kayla will be raising Victoria’s.
To further prove her case that environment, not genetic make up, is the determining factor in personality, Kayla chooses her client, Billy Osceola, shaman of the Ayes Indian tribe in the Everglades, as the father, and his daughter Windy Moon as the surrogate mother of Victoria’s royal-blooded child. Kayla represents the tribe in a lawsuit against the sugarcane king, ADOLPHO RAMIREZ, 50’s, who is opening a new sugarcane processing plant. At a protest during the opening ceremony at the plant, Billy is arrested, but released with the help of the attorney opposing Kayla, SIR GEORGE TOWNSEND, 30’s, who is also the man chosen by Victoria to be the biological father of her child, but sexually interested in Kayla. Upset by the release of Billy, Adolpho’s Haitian wife, MICHELINE, 40’s, who practices voodoo, places a curse on Kayla and Billy Osceola, forcing them to engage in activities opposite their nature.
Victoria’s bodyguard Charles, described by her as a modern example of Chaucer’s “strong and true, yet gentle knight” in The Canterberry Tales, is actually a spy for Chinese hackers who want to blackmail Victoria so that Chinese ownership of certain ports around the world will be advocated by her in her investments. Normally risk averse, Victoria is forced into risky and dangerous investments to keep the theft of funds from being discovered.
Kayla seduces Sir George and retains his sperm to be combined with Victoria’s eggs to create the embryo for surrogate mother Windy Moon, although Billy Osceola thinks he is the biological father. Instead, he is the biological father of the child Victoria will raise in England because Kayla gave Billy’s sperm to Sir George telling him it was his after they had sex.
In the cliffhanger at the end of the first season, three children are born:
1. A boy later known as Python Jack (a modern Tarzan character) – Victoria and Sir George’s biological son, to be raised by Billy Osceola and this daughter Windy Moon in the Everglades. Billy is not aware the child he is raising is not his and that he has a daughter in England.
2. Katherine, Kayla and Billy Osceola’s biological daughter, is raised in England by Victoria’s parents to be worthy of being married into the royal family. They think the child is Victoria’s and Sir George’s.
3. A girl later known as Dana The Celtic Princess – Kayla and Professor Matthews’ biological daughter with DNA from Bran The Blessed, raised by the professor and his daughter Bryony, who think the biological mother is Victoria, not Kayla.
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R. Reid Jr. Show Summary
“What I learned doing this assignment is how my work is organized from my BW frame work and some of it might look like repetition but may help us look very organized in a pitch meeting if a producer or executive asks us about this or other documents. It is definitely worth it to do this and draw from previous work and always keep creating.”
ENGAGE US IN THE MAIN MYSTERY:
SIGMA 2619
Our main character is sent to SIGMA 2619, the name given in the celestial year of 2619, we simple know it as Earth. Our main character has a simple task to bring back stolen TECH. The reports about what it does exactly is not known. But the TECH if left on Earth can be used to test on humans on this planet and do irreversible damage. The deadline of about 2 moon cycles is real or the home world of Bruce will be brutalized.
He is dispatched to SIGMA 2619 by portal but told his memory maybe foggy from an aftereffect of space travel by portal. Bruce arriving with skills to keep himself hidden comes with him. He goes after the TECH by tracing its residue left after being used. Only tracing its residue proves impossible to find the TECH.
But after following two people who are investigating the scene who are given high access he overhears there might have been a woman seen at places close by where these “incidents” of people loosing their memory have taken place.
Bruce follows the clues to the first place where it was thought this mysterious woman first appeared in a local college bar. In not knowing the effect of the earth drink alcohol and blunt mixed together, Bruce is challenged to deal with these substances that take him on a journey in his mind, like a waking dream. It appears he is just high and a little drunk only the mysterious woman appears in his dream and tells him a warning that he is the one who sent the TECH to earth in the first place and that his mind has been erased. And he is hunting down the people he sent to hid this tech in the first place and this ends the pilot. Bruce wakes up hungover, a stranger in a strange land and not knowing who to trust or who is real.
2. Create an outline using this structure or something similar:
i)Set up — (Character’s normal situation) The normal situation is not clear because the main character arrives on earth-kind of a blank slate with flashbacks slowly knowing little of where he is from or even if he is a good guy or a bad guy. <div>
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ii)Twist/Hook- he might be the enemy he is hunting when under the influence is told he is the one that gave the order to hid the TECH he is looking for.
iii) (The Real situation – Major Empathy / Distress) He is really a fish out of water not knowing the customs on earth as he is hunting an item he calls, THE TECH.
iv) Twist/Hook- the people he maybe hunting are possibly people he sent to SIGMA 2619/Earth to hide the tech.
v) (Impossible to solve conflict or major mystery). Who is the mysterious woman everyone is searching for?
vi)( Final Hook into the Series – Extreme Dramatic Question) While under the influence the Mysterious woman tells him that he sent THE TECH to earth to hide it and he shouldn’t be hunting the people sent to keep THE TECH safe.
3) rough draft of the outline
An alien is sent to earth and doesn’t know who to trust as he hunts for THE TECH, a technology that needs to be retrieved from dangerous people who may be using it to control the minds of humans, giving them skills to rob banks and wiping their minds when they are caught. A mysterious woman is accidentally discovered near and around each one of these incidents by a pair agents who are hot on her trail only they don’t know her next move.
As Bruce takes on SIGMA 2619’s custom he is tracing the residue left after THE TECH is used that leads him to a bar where he tries to take on local SIGMA 2619 habits, but this night is unlike any other with Bruce as he faces a college frosh week challenge and thinks he can outdrink humans in a human body without eating for two days that quickly falls flat and mixing in a state-allowed marijuana blunt called the “super” Susan result in a wacky trip into Bruce subconscious where the woman he is hunting stands next to him but being under the influence he thinks it is a dream never drank or smoked before that he is really the person who had THE TECH to start with and he sent this mysterious woman to get it.
Hearing a pounding he wakes up in a girl’s frat dorm not knowing what was real and what was not real. And outside<font face=”inherit”> the agents he was following that gave him the info about the </font>Mysterious<font face=”inherit”> woman are now knocking outside the frat dorm he has woken up in. This is the end of the first season/pilot.</font>
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Janeen’s Show Summary
Highlights of Entire Season model:
The Campion Farm
One Hour Dramedy series
Mike Campion loved only three women in his life: his next door neighbor Molly; his soulmate Cara; and his wife Mindy who Cara introduced to him. Only Cara is still alive.
Cara is a successful mind control practitioner in LA. Her biological clock is ticking so loudly it’s all she can hear. Cara has just become the executor of Mike and Mindy’s estate.
After Mike dumped his first love, Molly, years ago, she married his best friend, Jim Walrath, on the rebound. Jim married Molly for her land and always thought his son, Hunter, was probably Mike’s. Last summer, Molly drove into a train at a crossing about a mile from their house. Police found a suicide note on her computer.
Last Thanksgiving, Mike and Mindy updated their will leaving Cara in charge until their 11-year-old boy/girl twins are of age. At Christmas, Mindy whispered about premonitions of her own death. On New Year’s Eve, Mike and Mindy plowed right into a freight train — didn’t even try to stop — at the very same crossing where Molly had died.
Randi Campion, Mike’s mom, is a widow and a farmer who lost her favorite son and found out a couple of months ago that she has early onset Alzheimer’s. Only Mindy knew about it. Randi knows Alzheimer’s will leave her incapacitated. She’s already struggling.
The Campion farm is land rich and cash poor. Randi thinks the twins and Hunter can help Cara run the equipment, but Cara needs to learn about the climate change mitigation and carbon sequestration money the farm can earn. Most of all, Randi needs to convince Cara to use her mind control techniques to influence people, crops, animals, and finances in the farm’s favor — like Mindy did.
Cara’s more concerned with her ticking clock. The only man who catches her eye is Molly’s widower, Jim, who wrote Molly’s suicide note just minutes after her untimely demise.
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Module 2 Lesson 6
Jean’s Show Summary
What I learned doing this assignment is that breaking down the parts of the episode help me put together a more interesting summary that’s not like a book report. I’m happy with the first draft and am looking forward to elevating it.
1. Choose the Summary Format you like best.
Pilot as Inciting Incident
2. Create an outline using this structure or something similar:
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Set up — Character’s normal situation: Sharra,
an accountant with a photographic memory, is unlawfully fired for exposing
her crooked boss as a fraud.
</div><div>Twist/Hook: A strange job invitation by
Vault Agency that will take her away. Tanner, one of the agents was just
in Colonial Philadelphia and nReal situation – Major Empathy / Distress: Sharra
gets hassled by a goon of her crooked boss. She’s alone. Then she’s mugged
and warned to stay away from Vault Agency.Twist/Hook: Faolan, a rogue agent hiding
in 1825 London, has an unknown interest in Sharra and gets involved
investigating her mugging only to realize it’s a Vault agent behind it.
Impossible to solve conflict or major mystery:
The mugging isn’t her former boss’s doing. Tanner and Faolan are both seen
in setting from the past and then in Sharra’s time.Final Hook into the Series – Extreme Dramatic
Question: What is
Vault Agency? Who within its ranks wants her dead and why. What secrets is
Lazarus not telling Sharra?3. Turn it into a rough draft.
Sharra Lane is an accountant with perfect memory. It’s a gift and a curse. Like now, when she discovers her boss is embezzling money and she confronts him. Threats don’t scare her. But the thug sent to roughen her up does. She needs to escape but has no one. Or so she thinks.
Someone is watching her. It’s Tanner, a man from Colonial Philadelphia now dressed as a government agent.
Tanner gives Sharra a business card and an invitation to interview for a position with Vault Agency. She touches the logo and feels a small electrical charge. It’s weird. So is the recruitment interview with Lazarus Maitland, the Head Director. She has three days to decide. Lazarus has a note addressed to himself saying it’s essential Sharra is recruited but it comes with consequences. It’s signed with his own name.
Sharra researches Vault Agency and comes up with nothing. They don’t exist.
It’s day three. A letter arrives; she is being sued by her old boss. That, and a mugging gone bad sees Sharra back at Lazarus’ office being cared for by a Vault doctor while Tanner is sent after the stolen contract.
Meanwhile, Faolan, a rogue agent hiding in 1825 London, for unknown reasons, returns to the Vault to gather intel on Sharra. It sends him to the Vault office building in NYC where he recovers the contract from the thug, and with the man’s driver’s license, breaks into his home and discovers the attacks on Sharra are coming from someone inside the agency.
With a crooked boss on one side and a mysterious agency on the other, Sharra must brave the unknown to survive. And the first step is when Lazarus takes her hand and they both vanish.
What is Vault Agency? Who within its ranks wants her dead and why. What secrets is Lazarus not telling Sharra?
4. Return to your Binge-Worthy Framework and add any of the key Binge-Worthy components that will elevate the intrigue while working for the flow of the summary.
Engaging and Intriguing Character: Sharra with
perfect memory, Faolan a rogue agent, Tanner a Vault agent, Lazarus the
Head Director
Intriguing World: the secret world of time
travel – The Vault
</div><div>Empathy/Distress: mugged, stabbed, alone, needs
to flee NYC Undeserved
misfortune. Death of Sharra’s parents, abandonment by her brother, corrupt
boss threatening her life.Mystery: Sharra’s attacked and a man from 1825 shows up to
investigateWhy do they want to recruit Sharra?
Why is someone trying to stop her?
Layers: Vault Agency is a time travel agency that fixes the
past to make the future better.Lazarus recruits Sharra because his future self contacted him that she will fix the Vault.
Open Loops: Will Sharra’s assailant succeed in
stopping/killing her?
</div><div>Conflict: Keeping the time travel a
secret from Sharra and others of her timeline
Sharra thinks her boss is trying to hurt her,
but it’s not coming from him.Relationship Hooks: Sharra and Lazarus
both understand loyalty and the greater good over their own needs.Irony: Faolan wants to stay away from the
agency but his chance meeting with Sharra in the past, hooks him back into
the drama that made him leave in the first place. Sharra’s recruitment to the Vault is supposed to solve its problem when actually she is the creation of the problem, creating a time loop.</div>
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what I learnt from this assignment is to try and make the summary as simple as possible but to include as many hooks, layers and mysteries as possible.
Working title: Stroke
A 1 hour thriller
Like many aspiring actresses, NADINE juggles work with auditions. She has big dreams and is usually a strong, optimistic person but the knock backs are growing harder to come back from. Her father’s cancer has returned, the bills are mounting up and she is overwhelmed. Her friend ZOE wants to help. Zoe has a contact at IBIS studios and manages to get Nadine an audition for a big feature film. Despite the nerves and having a melt down at the audition, Nadine gets the job.
While on set she meets the head of IBIS studio, LEO LANGDON. Leo is a fascinating, charismatic man and they begin secretly seeing each other. Nadine has never had a relationship like this. Leo can literally make rain fall with the click of her fingers. For her birthday he recreates a scene from her favourite movie and flies her off for a weekend on his private jet. Their affair is exciting on one hand but Nadine is also ashamed. She knows how it would look to her family, friends and colleagues if it got out.
Although she is scared of how he will react, that she may risk her career, she decides to end it with Leo. Then she discovers three alarming things:
She is pregnant
Zoe is actually Leo’s daughter
The studio is a guise for a sinister, criminal syndicate and Leo is high up in the organisation.
Leo offers Nadine a deal. He will make her a star…but she must give him her baby.
When Nadine changes her mind, she soon realises the full magnitude of evil she is up against and her family’s life is now in danger.
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Rob’s Show Summary
What I learned doing this assignment is the value of writing a synopsis of the whole story out in full sentences and paragraphs to find the through line and exclude distracting details. It helps to focus all of the disparate elements, give it a skeleton, and establish better what belongs and what doesn’t.
C. Engage Us in the Main Mystery
Title: Mirage
Format: 1 hour supernatural mystery
An ancient spirit, without flesh or substance, lives in secret amongst mortals in a 21st century metropolis. He can pass through solid matter and is invulnerable to normal weapons. Drawn to thwart criminals and assist those in distress, he develops a reputation as a mysterious hero and vigilante. His face cannot be captured on camera, earning him the moniker “The Mirage”.
The Mirage has no memory of his origins, or understanding of why he exists in spirit form. Though he appears human, his touch is repulsive to the living, leading to isolation and loneliness. Weary of immortality and his incapacity for physical intimacy, The Mirage desperately seeks a way to become human.
Only one person knows his secret – 80-year-old Madeleine, whom he befriended when she was a child. But Madeleine is dying, and The Mirage fears the impending loss of his sole friend and confidante more than that of the dozens of acquaintances he has outlived over the centuries.
The Mirage rescues a tough young woman, Julia Lockhart, from an attack by a powerful demon, and discovers that she holds the key to unlocking his memories. We learn of a dark underbelly of demonic beings who have infiltrated society and prey upon humans. The Mirage, who can see through the demons’ human disguises, has battled and eluded them for as long as he can remember. Now they are led by the mysterious archaeologist Vincent Chamberlain, who is obsessed with destroying the Mirage and stealing his immortality for himself.
Also hunting The Mirage is Detective Brendan White, a by-the-book cop with a skepticism about all things supernatural. Deeply resentful of The Mirage’s unorthodox approach to crime-fighting, Detective White hunts The Mirage with a view to capturing him and exposing him as a fraud.
Vincent sends his demons to kidnap Madeleine, drawing The Mirage into a trap. But thwarted in his attempts to interrogate The Mirage about his powers and immortality, Vincent murders Madeleine out of spite. Empowered by rage, the Mirage escapes from Vincent’s trap and is about to exact revenge on his friend’s murderer, but relents at the last moment.
The demons turn on Vincent who discovers, too late, that he himself is merely a pawn in a far more sinister plot by the demons to destroy The Mirage and awaken from slumber their one true leader – the Lord of the Demons who can unleash an unstoppable demonic army upon the Earth.
The means of defeating the Demon Lord lies in The Mirage’s locked memories – memories that The Mirage learns he has hidden from himself for a reason. In a dramatic finale, The Mirage must overcome his reluctance to see the truth behind his immortality, and his unspeakable connection to the demons that have plagued him for centuries.
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