Post Day 6 Assignment Here

[Renee Brown]

Renee Brown Completed P/S Grid #1

What I learned in this assignment: I feel like my pilot is in pretty good shape structurally.

I completely rewrote Act 5 from outline to draft as to keep the momentum going and end the pilot on a better “gotta see where this is going” scene.

I also tightened up where the acts end. I made the turning points more concise. I have a lot of gaps in descriptions… so next lesson will really help. I’m at 42 pages now…

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[Sherri Coffee]

Sherri D. Coffee Module 4 Lesson 6 P/S Grid 1

What I learned from this assignment was to examine my story for problems and brainstorm the solutions to fix.

I reworked the teaser to create a more interesting sub-world and provide a better glimpse into my main character.

I strengthened the big picture conflict by better defining the character goals to create opposition.

A work in progress….but I can do this!

[Emmanuel Sullivan]

Emmanuel Sullivan Completed P/S Grid #1

What I learned doing this assignment is the grid helped identify holes in my outline and is a quick way to repair with the possible solutions.

[Barbara Gilmore]

I’m still working on Draft 2 but I already used Grids 1 and Grid 2 to help identify and solve some problems I see with Draft 1:

1. Weak Teaser:

I strengthened the Teaser by showing the likely sub-world (cash and drugs in the trunk).

2. Do My Acts work?

I strengthened Acts 1 & 2:

The character’s introduction and daily world.

Setting up a secret world of Jess that would be revealed as a TP at the Midpoint.

Act 1

I’d originally written Act 2 as Act 1 which meant I needed to write a new Act 1 to introduce my protagonist, Jess Pearson. Rather than use flashbacks for backstory I added a couple of layers and setups into Act 1 that would be revealed in Acts 2 and 3. So Jess is in court she always wins her cases, but this one is thrown out because the Judge dismisses her evidence. Her department loses a high profile case. Jess thinks someone leaked what she’d done to the Judge. She gets demoted and is sent to Green Lake.

The plan is that Act 1 is the cover up. In the Midpoint all will be revealed. So we’ll see a shift at the MIdpoint.

Weak Midpoint:

Midpoint

The midpoint will reveal that Jess is a secret hacker. She never leaves a trail or gets caught. It was she who tipped off the Judge so that she would lose the case. She had already spoken to her Captain about her desire to spend more time on cold cases. He had refused. By sending her to Green Lake, her Captain gets her out of his hair. Jess was already aware that Green Lake was looking for someone to help investigate its cold cases and she wants to return there to solve the case of her brother’s disappearance. The Judge is an ally.

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