Post Day 7 Assignment Here

[Bob Kiely]

BOB KIELY’S MONSTER REVEAL TRACK

What I learned doing this assignment is the importance of pacing and escalation of the monster reveals and their consequences to the character victims and provides another supporting layer to the plot and spine of the story.

Atmosphere of Evil established:

Cold Open with old witch as only attendee to a funeral in a creepy “potters field” cemetery. Cheap tombstone marker dates the burial as 1860.

Horror Situation: Foggy, creepy graveyard situation.

Reaction: Witch in black shroud with red eyes.

Who is your monster and what is their terror?

1. Powers: Witch with strong physic and physical powers, including telekinesis. Ageless.

2. Limitations: Has influence only over the land of the cemetery as well as the ground beneath.

3. Weaknesses: Can’t survive out of the cemetery and now condo yard bounds.

4. Plan/Purpose/Appetite: To avenge those who have desecrated or transgressed respect for the bodies disturbed during construction of the new project. She demands an eye for an eye for her victims.

ACT 1

Current time. Zoning board meeting where approval is given to a developer to build upon the site of the cemetery with some restrictions. Developer takes shortcuts including the bulldozing of six gravesites that were scheduled to be relocated. The operator of the bulldozer shuts off the vehicle and urinates on what was a gravesite. MONSTER REVEAL He is pulled down into the marshy ground as the first victim and portent of things to come.

Horror Situation: Bulldozer operator gets pulled down not the grave.

Reaction: Total fear on his face as his head submerges into the quicksand-like muck.

Character Death 1: Bulldozer operator

Why: Desecrates grave by urinating on it.

How: Gets suck down into the mucky ground.

Connect with the characters:

Open house at the new condo. Developer gives his pitch to the assembled buyers.

The characters are warned not to do it:

The same witch who is now sitting in the back of the room warns the buyers that “nothing good will come of this.” The developer dismisses her to the buying prospects as a crazy old fool.

Horror Situation: Deception. Innocent buyers being lured into shoddy cursed project.

Reaction: Denial of warning. Condescension.

Denial of Horror:

Six of the new buyers on the same floor have a housewarming party where they toast to the ridiculousness of the witch’s warning.

Horror Situation: Subconscious impending doom.

Reaction: Buyers still in denial, but one is taking the warning more seriously.

Safety taken away:

Scary, unexplained phenomena happen throughout the building. The building inspector, who got paid off by the developer comes in response to some of the physical building complaints.

Horror Situation: Spooky situation as building inspector goes into the inner rooms in the basement.

Reaction: Try to solve building issues in shoddy construction.

Monster: The nature of the beast.

He examines the faulty foundations and is killed. MONSTER REVEAL . But we don’t see the actual killing yet, just the evidence.

Horror Situation: Monster approaching.

Reaction: Tries to escape.

Character Death 2: Building inspector

Why: He colluded with corrupt developer and got paid off.

How: He gets squashed by falling support beam.

MONSTER REVEAL:

ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN

Isolated / Trapped / Abducted:

The inspector does not return from his inspection in the basement. Two of the men go down to investigate his disappearance. They see the head of the bulldozer operator’s head on a pike, and a trail of blood leading down a tunnel. MONSTER REVEAL

Horror Situation: Pursued. Forced into life threatening situation.

Reaction: Try to solve by investigation absence of inspector.

One of us killed: ALSO MOSTER REVEAL

One of the men foolishly investigates and is killed by the witch.

Horror Situation: Isolation.

Reaction: Other man gets lost getting out.

MIDPOINT: The monster is worse than we thought!

Full pursuit by killer:

Through witchcraft and powerful evil forces, she basically encapsulates the building making it impenetrable from the outside and sealed on the inside. MONSTER REVEAL

Terrorized –

Monster takes 2 more lives, leaving only first couple with cat left. But she needs one more victim to make up for the six desecrated graves.

Horror Situation: Isolated in condo as witch encapsulates it.

Reaction: MONSTER REVEAL Couple try to escape. Don’t make it out.

Character death 3: Developer

How: Gets head sliced off by the witch (if she is exposed yet)

Character death 4: Gay guy.

Why: He stupidly disregards the danger they are in and goes off into the tunnels beneath the building (the witches world)

How: We don’t know exactly but hear his screams. Maybe find later.

Character death 5: The lawyer husband

Why: He conducts a mock trial in witch’s world. Doesn’t go well for him.

How: Taken away and has head scythed off.

ACT 3 — FULL OUT HORROR

Fight to the death:

Couple have plan of escape but the cat runs down to the basement and wife won’t leave without the cat, so she and hubby go down into the bowels of the building. Cats directs them to the portal to the killing fields under the building and its yards.

Horror Situation: Isolation and tortured mentally as the remaining couple can’t get out.

Reaction: Escape. They try to find way out in the tunnels.

Hysteria:

Husband goes into tunnel to retrieve the cat. While he is gone, the wife is petrified, is grabbed from behind. It turns out to be a homeless squatter who lives, unknowingly to the witch, in her domain, and knows the way out. The husband returns with the cat with the witch in pursuit. MONSTER REVEAL

Horror Situation: Isolation. Wife left alone after husband goes looking for runaway cat.

Reaction: Fight. Wife grabbed from behind. Struggles with attacker.

The thrilling escape from death:

The homeless man guides them to an escape hatch.

Horror Situation: Pursued by witch.

Reaction: Escape as witch gets closer.

Death returns to take one or more.

The homeless man lets the couple go first and pays the price with his life. MONSTER REVEAL

Horror Situation: Tormented. Homeless squatter can’t make it out.

Reaction: Sees there is no escape. Smiles at couple as they manage to get out.

Character death 6: Homeless squatter

Why: Basically sacrifices himself for couple one’s husband.

How: Gets pulled down from escape hole.

Resolution:

Now out of the grounds, the couple with their cats stand on a hill with the townspeople looking at an emergency response team leading others from the building before it spectacularly goes up in flames and collapses into the ground.

Horror Situation: Tormented at seeing their friends and home destroyed. Figure of witch in inferno not burning.

Reaction: Fear of her return.

[Nadia Tholance]

ASSIGNMENT 7 – NADIA’S MONSTER REVEAL TRACK

(Title: “GRAHAMSTOWN”)

What I learned from this assignment: I learned about the importance of following a sequence of events to obtain a gradient of horrific events… a bit like turning the pages of a book to discover ‘what’s next’!

A- COMPONENTS OF THE MONSTER:

· Powers: The appearance and age group of the monster(s) make it seem harmless; they are cunning, move in pack and isolate their victim and take them by surprise. They use unexpected weapons.

· Limitations: They can only choose their victims during their 21^st year and only in the limit of the town (Grahamstown).

· Weaknesses: The monster finds its strength in the group/pack and will not attack alone. It cannot kill outside the town limits.

· Plan/Purpose/Appetite: The Monster believes to be designated by God to purify the young on their 21^st year (biblical no representing the ‘exceedingly sinfulness of sin’) which will give them a second youth (by consuming organs & blood which are failing their elderly bodies). The act of purification can only be accomplished by the ones who fit the ‘biblical nos 65 & 77’.

· Who/ what is the monster(s): The ones amongst the elderly believers who are marked by the nos ‘65’ and ‘77’: they have the no 8 tattooed on their body as biblical symbol of ‘New Birth’ .

B- SEQUENCE THE REVEALS & CREATE DEMAND FOR EACH REVEAL:

1- Demand: Intrigue: why is this young woman celebrating her 21^st alone, quietly and in the dark?

Monster reveal: There is something about having her birthday that terrifies her!

2- Demand: To solve the mystery, we have to come to Grahamstown and discover what is wrong with the town.

Monster reveal: At night fall, young people barricade themselves indoors.

3- Demand: Young people warn the new students in town not to go out at night and not to tell anyone when it’s their birthday.

Monster reveal: Somehow, young people in their 21^st year are vanishing or found dead and horribly mutilated.

4- Demand: Public places at night time are full of old people who behave with energy far above their biological age.

Monster reveal: Some mysterious purpose is making the elderly come out at night in pack

5- Demand: Paranoia: a young woman is terrified by an old homeless man who follows her at dawn.

Monster reveal: The elderly are perceived as a menace.

6- Demand: A girl needs a bodyguard on her 21^st birthday and will jump through a window to her death when an old man in a bodyguard uniform walks in.

Monster reveal: Why is she so terrified of this old man that she would prefer jump to her death than whichever fate he could bring.

7- Demand: A couple gets lured out at night, trapped and will be tortured and killed by some elderly.

Monster reveal: What brings these harmless looking old people to act like total monsters!

8- Demand: Apprehension: Elderly people in an old age home are behaving very strangely towards a young woman celebrating her 21^st.

Monster reveal: We need to find out what triggers the monster in the elderly when someone turns 21!

9- Demand: There is a surge of aggression and killings from Elderly people on young people (all 21) all over town.

Monster reveal: The targeted young people are no longer safe indoors at night and look for shelter in churches, where they will not find protection but the answer to behind the killings and the monsters’ mad motivations.

10- Demand: ANNA finds out about the connection between the bible and the ‘death by nos’ and why “21” is the target of all killings. She then urges others to leave the church with her as she realizes it’s the monster of the beast, but they won’t listen, apart from MATTHIAS.

Monster reveal: The reason why the monsters kill has been revealed by Anna! We now know the why and the who!

11- Demand: The survivors manage to make it to the edge of town, killing some monsters on the way, but ANNA (the graced one) decides she has to go back to make sure the monster never returns.

Monster reveal: Although the monsters within the elderly have been killed, evil may return when its number comes up! (FOR THE SEQUEL!!!)

ACT 1—SET UP THE HORROR:

· Atmosphere of evil established: Press articles with graphic photos on a computer screen showing gruesome young people murdered or vanished; the number 21 comes back again and again on the screen, at the end, a town’s name appears – GRAHAMSTOWN. The computer screen reflects the strained face of a young woman and, in the background, we see the reflection of candles burning on a birthday cake on a table then we see the terror in her wide bulging eyes followed by her shrilling scream as someone keeps knocking, harder and harder, at the door in the background while humming in faint frail and soft voice “happy birthday to you”!

Horror situation: monster trying to get to you – a girl is spending her birthday quietly, all alone and in the dark; in front of her on the table, a cake with 2 candles forming the number 21. A little knock at the door, she is holding her breath and as the knock gets louder we see her eyes widening with fear.

Reaction – she quietly blows the candles and closes her eyes.

1- Demand: Intrigue: why is this young woman celebrating her 21^st alone, quietly and in the dark?

Monster reveal: There is something about having her birthday that terrifies her!

Horror situation: lost – a character takes a short cut through the park and gets lost.

Reaction – He starts panicking then is relieved when he sees a sign, not knowing it’s a trap.

· Connect with the characters: A group of new students; we discover each character, their personalities, their struggle, their attempts to fit in, in a college where other students behave strangely and in a town with a secret.

· The characters are warned not to do it: The new students to the college are told to never go out alone after dark and if they must then to stay in pack and never to mix with the friendly old people.

2- Demand: To solve the mystery, we have to come to Grahamstown and discover what is wrong with the town.

Monster reveal: At night fall, young people barricade themselves indoors.

· Denial of horror: The new students will brush off the advice as plain silly and paranoid and mean; they are young and strong, why should they be afraid of some old folks even if they are the only ones walking in the dark streets of the small town!

3- Demand: Young people warn the new students in town not to go out at night and not to tell anyone when it’s their birthday.

Monster reveal: Somehow, young people in their 21^st year are vanishing or found dead and horribly mutilated.

· Safety taken away: When young people are stranded as cars strangely break down, buses don’t show and taxis don’t stop, being home before dark becomes an impossible mission.

Horror situation: forced into a dangerous environment – when Matthias’ car breaks down and he has to walk back into the rain, he arrives into the town at night and walks into a bar to call a tow car, only to find that the bar is packed with old people only.

Reaction – he is surprised then senses (his journalist instincts!) that something is not quite right in that setting.

4- Demand: Public places at night time are full of old people who behave with energy far above their biological age.

Monster reveal: Some mysterious purpose is making the elderly come out at night in pack

· Monster- the nature of the beast: With old people infiltrated in all areas of the small town’s life, knowing who the monster is and whom to trust is a matter of life and death.

Horror situation: not knowing who is possessed – the characters don’t know which ones of the elderly are monsters.

Reaction – they don’t know who to trust and are suspicious of everyone around, feeling even more isolated.

Horror situation: unknown motive – the group hasn’t a clue why some young people vanish or get killed.

Reaction – Some take action and decide to investigate (Matthias, Andrew), while some will go in total denial (Anna, Naomi, James).

Horror situation: menacing stranger – JOANNA followed by an old homeless guy, scaring her by shouting that her end is near and to be careful of ‘the smiling ones’!

Reaction – she gets scared, thinks he is just scary why he was trying to warn her, and warns straight into what the arms of the monster, thinking she’ll be safe.

5- Demand: Paranoia: a young woman is terrified by an old homeless man who follows her at dawn.

Monster reveal: The elderly are perceived as a menace.

Character death 1: JOANNA

· Why: she is the one in the group who suspects there is some form of evil amongst the elderly; she represents a threat which needs to be eliminated when she starts sending clues to a newspaper.

· How: she is blindsided, fooled by the homeless guy who follows her and she takes him as a threat, walking straight into the safety of her favourite bakery where she’ll be poisoned with her favourite cake.

ACT 2—THE POINT OF NO RETURN:

· Isolated/trapped/abducted: Young people are no longer even safe in doors as the monsters try to break in or to lure them outside in desperation to get what they need.

Horror situation: attacked – a character will be attacked by the monster.

Reaction – total disbelief, then shock at the strength of the attacker.

Horror situation: chased – a character will be chased by the monster.

Reaction – fear mixed with disbelief.

Horror situation: mentally tortures – Mia will keep receiving anonymous phone calls before her 21^st, counting down the number of days she has left to live.

Reaction – she’ll go through different stage of emotions as the date of her birthday gets closer and strange deaths occur: from annoyance, to anger to dread and finally hysteria.

6- Demand: A girl needs a bodyguard on her 21^st birthday and will jump through a window to her death when an old man in a bodyguard uniform walks in.

Monster reveal: Why is she so terrified of this old man that she would prefer jump to her death than whichever fate he could bring.

Character death 2: MIA

· Why: it’s her 21^st and she believes to be untouchable because of her father’s wealth; the fact that she has a bodyguard won’t save her.

· How: the monster will impersonate her bodyguard and penetrate in the safety of her home. She’ll try to escape and jump through a window, plummeting to her death.

Horror situation: environment changing around them – A couple of drinking buddies are at the local bar at night, suddenly one of them shouts “cheers, birthday boy, happy 21^st!”; then the bar goes dead silent for a few seconds, all eyes on them, and the sound resume but the atmosphere has changed.

Reaction – a few young people will discretely leave the bar while some elderly will get closer to the drinking buddies offering to buy a round to the birthday boy.

· One of us killed: Naomi and James – the lovers – will be the first to go. Lust and romance will led them outside after dark and cause their death.

Horror situation: lured into danger – the monster is cunning and lures the lovers into a meeting after dark with the promise of intimacy.

Reaction – When the couple realizes that the message didn’t come from one of them and that they are out at night in an isolated place, they start experiencing an overwhelming fear.

7- Demand: A couple gets lured out at night, trapped and will be tortured and killed by some elderly.

Monster reveal: What brings these harmless looking old people to act like total monsters!

Horror situation: see another killed – Naomi will see watch her boyfriend, James, get tortured and killed before her eyes.

Reaction – she freezes and watch in horror then throws up.

Character death 3: JAMES

· Why: because, with Naomi, he represents the ‘sinfulness of sin’ as they disobey the rules by meeting outside at night and to have sex without being married.

· How: James will be tortured to death in front of Naomi who will have to watch him, both stark naked.

Character death 4: NAOMI

· Why: just like James, she has sinned in the eyes of the monster. She’ll have to endure mental torture by having to watch her lover die.

· How: she’ll go insane and even though the monster releases her (still naked), she’ll wonder aimlessly on the road at night in a daze and get hit by a truck.

MIDPOINT—THE MONSTER IS WORSE THAN WHAT WE THOUGHT:

Full pursuit by the killer: They must now do whatever they can to protect themselves at night from the monsters who try to break in and become increasingly aggressive and cunning.

Horror situation: threatened– at the old age home, some elderly start showing signs of increasing strange behaviour and unusual strength.

Reaction – the staff will ignore the signs, not seeing imminent danger.

Horror situation: walking into a trap – at the old age home, a surprise birthday party has been organised for ANNA, who is turning 21.

Reaction – she is overwhelmed by the elderly kindness, then starts sensing something are not quite right and as fear start to increase she’ll feel trapped.

Character death 5: STEPHEN

· Why: wanting to save Anna from the elderly in the old age home surrounding her.

· How: he is the sacrificed lamb; the audience need to see a character willing to die for love and to the premise of Anna’s special ‘connection’ to the monster.

· Horror situation: face to face with the monster –the monster shows his true face to Anna by killing STEPHEN in front of her own eyes.

· Reaction – she unsettled the monster by calmly getting down on her knees and starting to pray.

8- ­Demand: Apprehension: Elderly people in an old age home are behaving very strangely towards a young woman celebrating her 21^st.

Monster reveal: We need to find out what triggers the monster in the elderly when someone turns 21!

ACT 3—FULL OUT HORROR:

· Fight to the death: Some of the characters won’t make it and will be massacred; some will sacrifice themselves to save others. The monsters are now seen for who they are and no longer underestimated: there’s nothing vulnerable, friendly or innocent about them anymore, they are wolves in lambs’ clothing!

Horror situation: wounded – one of the characters is wounded by a blow on the head with a walking stick.

Reaction – he is stunned, shocked and looks in total dismay at the blood pouring profusely from his forehead while the monster looks at him with a sweet smile.

· Terrorized: The characters find themselves increasingly isolated, unable to leave town, and terrified as night falls.

· Hysteria: It’s now a war between the young terrified desperate to survive characters against the old determined to get what they need (blood & flesh) to regain their youth.

9- Demand: There is a surge of aggression and killings from Elderly people on young people (all 21) all over town.

Monster reveal: The targeted young people are no longer safe indoors at night and look for shelter in churches, where they will not find protection but the answer to behind the killings and the monsters’ mad motivations.

· The thrilling escape from death: Some will manage to escape, to find momentary safety in one of the many churches… only to realize they have stepped in the belly of the beast!

10- Demand: ANNA finds out about the connection between the bible and the ‘death by nos’ and why “21” is the target of all killings. She then urges others to leave the church with her as she realizes it’s the monster of the beast, but they won’t listen, apart from MATTHIAS.

Monster reveal: The reason why the monsters kill has been revealed by Anna! We now know the why and the who!

Horror situation: trapped – some characters seek refuge in a church at night, only to realize this may not be a safe place after all.

Reaction – they start panicking, looking for somewhere to hide or an escape route.

Horror situation: dilemma- who to save – Andrew (the strong as an ox guy) finds out that a group of students are trapped in the church and surrounded by the monster(s); he can either create a diversion and risk being captured and killed or watch them being taken and killed.

Reaction – he takes a deep breath and makes a choice.

Horror situation: a character becomes a liability – Andrew will be seriously injured by the monster and, when trying to escape through the woods, will slow down his friends’ escape and jeopardize their only chance of making it through the woods to reach the edge of the town limits.

Reaction – he will pretend to take a rest break, letting his friends get a bit ahead, then will take off in the opposite direction shouting at the monsters to create a diversion and save his friends, sacrificing his own life.

Character “ near” death 6: ANDREW

· Why: the audience needs to get a glimpse of hope by seeing the strongest character save the day; then their hope gets crushed as he falls and gets caught.

· How: when the group has taken refuge in the church and surrounded, he’ll create a diversion to allow them to escape but will fall into a bear trap running into the woods and the elderly will close in on him; the audience will think he died but he’ll escape… only to be sacrificed later by ANNA!!!

· Death returns to take one or more: More will need to die before they can unify and overcome the monsters.

Horror situation: escape route cut off – the only road out of town is blocked by the monster(s), preventing the car with a group of characters to escape.

Reaction – MATTHIAS urges ANNA to step on the gas and run over the monster(s) but the driver is not willing to do so, as she still can’t face the idea that the harmless looking creatures on the road are monster(s).

Horror situation: character refuses to take action – Anna is reluctant to run over the monster, she is forced to make a choice between risking killing innocent people in the process of running over the elderly blocking the road or risking the lives of the people in the car with her (Andrew and Matthias).

Reaction – she’ll choose to sacrifice Andrew, he’ll understand that it’s their only chance and will not leave Matthias (who is against seeing his friend going to a certain death) a choice in the matter.

Character death 7: ANDREW

· Why: the audience needs to understand that this character’s role is to save the day (twice!) but also that he is doomed.

· How: he’ll be killed by the pack when he charges upon them with a baseball bat, making a breach for the car with Anna and Matthias to squeeze in and drive to the outskirts of town, and pull over just after the town limit indicating they are no longer in GRAHAMSTOWN!

11- Demand: The survivors manage to make it to the edge of town, killing some monsters on the way, but ANNA (the graced one) decides she has to go back to make sure the monster never returns.

Monster reveal: Although the monsters within the elderly have been killed, evil may return when its number comes up! (FOR THE SEQUEL!!!)

· Resolution: When Anna’s deep unshakable faith and innocence bring her to the ultimate decision: to leave Matthias (whom she has fallen in love with and is pregnant from, which he doesn’t know) and choses what she sees as her calling; she chooses to go back to Grahamstown to make sure evil never returns to the elderly and that the words of God are never again misused for evil purposes.

[jaye Blohm]

JAYE’S MONSTER REVEAL TRACK

What I learned is the monster must be revealed at the right time. We need to build suspense and terror and strike at the right time

A. Who is your monster and what is their terror?

Powers? Hallucination, body control, control of nature and surroundings, infiltrates bodies and dreams.

Limitations? Bound to the property (the creek, the tree, backyard, house)

Weaknesses? Actual babies. The house wants a living baby. And it likes Whitney, because she wants to have her baby. The only one the monster spares.

Plan/Purpose/Appetite? Revenge and wanting to raise a living child on their own

B. Sequence the reveals.

Opening/prologue:
– Nature goes nuts for some unknown reason… (the actual reason is that the tree is being disturbed, which the house wants to stay intact.) Darkened skies, high winds, whips tree into a frenzy, freak accidentoccurs. One man is killed, the other maimed.
During 1st Act:
– Shadows in windows (it’s probably Josh, playing games… he has been gone a while…)
– Cell phone service is disturbed
– While the others go to investigate, Olivia stays behind — too afraid

1st Act turning point:
– When Olivia finally does decide to go inside, the tree and creek attack her, drowning her. We will see black muck in the water, and she will be violently drowned. We will see incredible strength.
– At this point the kids do not know that they are unable to leave.

1st half of 2nd Act:
– Shadows on the wall, but more like images… not flat like shadows, but no definition, like 3D objects. Fast, subtle sounds.
– They take over Robert and suffocate him with his own weed smoke.

– Olivia will reappear, inside the house, but we know it’s not really her.
– Friends will see her but she will act weird and wander off in a mysterious room. They ignore it and think she’s just wasted and needs to rest.

Midpoint:

– Josh in the basement, calls Karen and Sarah (who have left Robert because even though he’s down, his pants are down and he moans, so they just want to leave his perverted ass alone).

– While going to see Josh, he’s disfigured and gross! His chest is ripped open! Something rushes out of his chest after them!

– Moans, ripping, guttural sounds

– Grabbing legs, strangulation

2nd half of 2nd Act:
– The monster is terrorizing the three remaining characters. “Olivia” leads them to a room of religious horrors.
– David is crushed!

3rd Act:
– Johnny, from the beginning, now an old man, is in the house! But how?? (It let him in).

– He tells the surviving kids, Marcus and Whitney that it wants her baby!

– Marcus kills Johnny himself (out of hysteria) and leaves Whitney behind! Sees the door open and bolts!

– Whitney screams as “Olivia” descends!

– The house has let him out though, and when he is outside, the tree and the creek will murder him in the worst ways!

– The door will SLAM shut!

Resolution:

– Whitney will be restrained in some way, I’m imagining her on a cross in the room of religion. And “Olivia” will be tending to her, ensuring that her baby is born.

C. Create Demand for each clue/reveal.

Added to outline below:

ACT 1 – THE SETUP FOR HORROR
Atmosphere of Evil established: 1950s Father and son landscapers to a house to remove a tree. Wind picks up, sky darkens, the tree is ominous, landscaping equipment not working right.
Horror Situation: Father is killed by machinery and son, Johnny, is maimed, loses an arm… at “the hands” of the tree. #Monster Reveal
Reaction – Escape: A housemaid screams and runs inside. A nun watches from an upstairs window. The son escapes.
Horror Situation: The tree and creek are haunted.
Connect with the characters: Present day. The house and grounds have been abandoned for decades. David tells of the urban legend of the grounds are haunted. He entices his friends to have a party there… in a “ghost-story environment.
Denial of Horror: They stop by a convenience store, and an old one-armed homeless crazy guy (Johnny) tells them not to go. Begs them… they laugh at the crazy old man and assure him they will be fine.
Horror Situation: Josh wants to graffiti the house. Starts on the outside, but a door creaks open. He goes inside….
Reaction: After a while, the kids wonder what’s up with Josh. They investigate. They feel uneasy, but push past it. They see the open door. They go in. Except Olivia She don’t want to go in that creepy old house. #Monster Reveal
Denial of Horror: Olivia is getting scared. She hears noises, voices. The forest beyond the creek is freaking her out. #Monster Reveal
Safety taken away: Olivia is nervous, calls out for her friends; no answer. She contemplates going into the house. She tries to occupy herself with music on her phone. It’s not working right. Tries to call David, but there’s no signal.
Reaction: She finally decides to go inside.
Character Death: – The tree grabs her and drowns her in the creek, in a very believable and horrifying way. OLIVIA DOWN #Monster Reveal

ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN
Isolated / Trapped / Abducted: The kids in the house haven’t realized they aren’t able to leave.
Horror Situation: No one knows where Josh is, but asshole Marcus thinks it’s fun to scare people in dark corners.
Denial: Still no sign of Josh, the kids continue partying. (Whitney, Marcus, David)
Reaction: Robert has plans. He takes Karen upstairs to investigate and comes on to her. She is less than interested. Sarah comes in. Now Karen is interested.
Horror Situation: Robert smokes a blunt and starts to pleasure himself while watching the girls make out. A disgusting shape appears on the ceiling. #Monster Reveal
Horror situation: CUT TO – Dead Olivia appears in the back doorway. #Monster Reveal
Denial: The kids think she’s super high. She goes to a dark room down the hall.
Horror situation: Back in the bedroom. Robert’s own smoke fills his lungs and refuses to let him exhale. #Monster Reveal
Denial: The girls think he’s messing enjoying himself with his grunts and moans, so they ignore him.
Character Death: Robert dies right in front of them. ROBERT DOWN
Denial: The girls think he passed out.
Reaction: Karen and Sarah leave.
(Pivotal Moment): Whitney and Marcus talk. She tells him she’s pregnant. He is not happy.
Horror Situation: Noises rom the basement. It’s Josh! He calls for Karen and Sarah to come down. He sounds funny. Odd. #Monster Reveal.
(Pivotal Moment): Johnny will have a dream in which Olivia reveals to him that Whitney is pregnant. #Monster Reveal. Johnny feels compelled to help.

ACT 3 — FULL OUT HORROR
Reaction: Karen and Sarah investigate, carefully; cautiously.
Horror Situation: Karen and Sarah see Josh is disfigured and gross. JOSH DOWN #Monster Reveal
Reaction: They make a run for it.
Horror Situation: Sarah lags behind and Karen throws her down the basement stairs.
Character Death: Sarah gets mauled. SARAH DOWN #Monster Reveal
Reaction: Karen tries to get out of the basement.
Horror Situation: Karen falls through a stair that breaks (the monster pulls her through) #Monster Reveal
Character Death: Karen is hung by the monster (an umbilical cord???). KAREN DOWN #Monster Reveal
Horror Situation: David, Whitney, and Marcus hide in a room. It’s an old religious room, alter, candles, creepy statues. Whitney has always been protected!
Character Death: Olivia kills David. Crushes him. DAVID DOWN #Monster Reveal.
Horror Situation: Johnny appears in the doorway of the religious room, and Marcus freaks out… why is Johnny there? To try and help? Who knows, because Marcus kills him. JOHNNY DOWN
The thrilling escape from Death: The door remains open and Marcus makes a run for it.
Release: We think Marcus is on this way out, but the tree grabs him.
Character Death: The tree mangles the shit out of him. MARCUS DOWN. #Monster Reveal.
Horror Situation: Olivia SLAMS the door to the house. #Monster Reveal.
Resolution: Whitney is inside. A captive. Being kept alive by “Olivia” for the sake of her unborn child, which the house wants. #Monster Reveal.

[Rob Bertrand]

ROB’S MONSTER REVEAL TRACK

What I learned: I learned that the monster and its secrets must be doled out in small increments, adding more and more information so that the characters and audience know how to defeat it in the finale. I also learned that writing and creating in the middle of a heatwave is ridiculously hard. (115 degrees today 🙁 )

Who is your monster and what is their terror?

The Monster is a Poltergeist manifested by the guilt and shame of a dying serial killer.

– Powers: It can manifest as a variety of ghosts, moves objects, phantom voices, can cause unseen physical harm (punches, slaps), can levitate large objects, banging/thumping noises, cause hallucinations
– Limitations: Bound to the house, land and surrounding beach. Ghost of wife can only manifest at low tide. The monster requires a tremendous amount of energy and can only manifest for short period of time.
– Weaknesses: Their power derives from the old man. They will cease to exist if he dies.
– Plan/Purpose/Appetite: The poltergeist wants to punish the old man for his crimes, reveal him to be a killer and lead investigators to their bodies so they can be put to rest.

OUTLINE

ACT 1 — SET UP FOR HORROR

Atmosphere of Evil established: A Hospice Nurse attends to Mr. Scheckla, who is dying of a terminal illness in his beachfront home. She puts him to bed early, against his wishes. The Nurse has a paranormal experience that shakes the very foundations of her beliefs.

Horror Situation: Old Man Scheckla sees a beautiful woman approaching the back door.
Reaction – Denial – The old man doesn’t believe it.

Demand: Mystery – who is the woman?
Monster Reveal: A beautiful woman walks up to the sliding glass back door. The door opens and she’s gone.

Horror Situation: An invisible presence climbs into bed with the old man.
Reaction – Hide – The old man hides under the blankets and rings his bell for help, screaming

Horror Situation: Phantom Voices – Crying
Reaction – Try to solve it – The Hospice Nurse slowly opens the closet and checks under the bed. Nothing is there.

Demand: The old man demands that the hospice nurse check the closet and underneath the bed, like a child. Nothing is there.
Monster Reveal: The Nurse looks up (after checking under bed), straight into the decomposed face of the woman from the beach.

Character Death 1: Hospice Nurse
Why: The Hospice Nurse was rude to the old man.
How: The Hospice Nurse’s body is bent, broken and twisted Her body is later discovered as a trophy in the kill room.

Connect with the characters: We meet Abby and the Paranormal Team as they investigate a single mother’s home for paranormal activity. The activity is debunked using their scientific method.

Horror Situation: Banging sounds
Reaction – Try to solve it: Tommy investigates the plumbing and finds an issue.
Horror Situation: Feeling of being watched.
Reaction – Try to solve it: Noelle detects high levels of EMF (electromagnetic field)
Horror Situation: Strange Odor
Reaction – Try to solve it – Abby discovers the source of the smell.

Al Scheckla arrives to his childhood home, with his wife and teenage daughter. They find the hospice nurse has abandoned the old man.

Horror Situation: Abandoned Old Man
Reaction – Fight – Al finds his dying father, abandoned and loses his temper.
Horror Situation: Shaking/Moving Objects
Reaction – Denial – The room shakes, a picture frame flies across the room and shatters.

Demand: Why has the Hospice Nurse abandoned the old man?
Monster Reveal: A tremor rocks the house and a picture frame flies across the room. A photo of Al’s mother. The woman from the opening.

Horror Situation: Body horror with the Old Man
Reaction – Try to solve it – The Old Man soiled himself. Al must give his father a bath.

The characters are warned not to do it: While the Old Man takes a bath, Al fights with hospice care on the phone. Al is warned not to take care of the old man alone. He should be in a care facility. The Old Man won’t leave. Daughter explores the house.

Horror Situation: Frozen Bathtub Scare
Reaction – Escape – The old man is pulled under the warm bath water. He tries to escape, but is frozen in place as the water turns to ice. Al must break the ice to pull him out.

Horror Situation: Mirror/Ceiling Game – Luminous Balls of Light
Reaction – Try to solve it – Ellie plays a game and follows mysterious balls of light using a hand mirror. It leads her to Grandfather’s open safe. Ellie finds old S&M photos. Grossed out, Ellie locks the safe then finds her father’s old View Master Collection.

Horror Situation: Objects Moving
Reaction – Denial – Barbara looks at old family album. When she looks up, several pieces of furniture have been moved.

Denial of Horror:
After the family experiences paranormal activity, Al assures his wife and daughter that the house is safe. He grew up there.

Horror Situation: Bird slams window
Reaction – Denial – “That’s not a ghost.”

Safety taken away:
After receiving notification that the University Parapsychology Lab has lost its funding and must close, Professor Tillman decides that it’s time to retire. The Professor tells Abby that it’s time to stop chasing ghosts, or she’ll end up like him, “Unpublished and a laughing stock in the scientific community.”

The family witnesses the old man beaten by an invisible presence and thrown around the room. The teenage daughter records it on her cell phone. They are powerless to stop it.

Horror Situation: View Master Slide Show Scare.
Reaction – Curious – Ellie helps her grandfather use the View Master.
Horror Situation: Murder victim slide show.
Reaction – Escape – The old man panics after seeing ghostly image on view master
Horror Situation: Attack by unseen force
Reaction – Escape – The Old Man is beaten by an unseen force and thrown around the room.

Demand: Our first glimpse of victims.
Monster Reveal: The old man uses the view master. Each slide reveals a different woman in various states of decomposition. Ends on the Old Man’s Wife.

Monster: The nature of the beast:
Abby receives some astonishing footage from the Scheckla house and tries to convince her grandfather to investigate. The Professor declines. Abby and The Paranormal Team “borrows” the Mobile Lab (RV) from the University and heads to the Coast, without the Professor’s approval. One last chance to prove ghosts are real.

ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN

Isolated / Trapped / Abducted:
On the first day of the investigation, the house loses power and communication to the outside world, due to a storm. (Thunder, lightning, fog.) Day 1: Interviews, Walkthrough, Equipment/Cameras setup, Research on house, Investigation

Horror Situation: Interviews with Scheckla Family – Questions about background, medical history, psychological background, medications, family dynamic.
Monster Reveal: The story of Al’s mother’s disappearance is revealed. “She left when I was young.”

Horror Situation: House Tour
Reaction – Try to solve it – The team takes EMF and Temperature readings

Horror Situation: 2 Person Team: EVP Session and Photo Session.
Reaction – Try to solve it – Abby conducts an EVP session while Noelle takes polaroid photos.

Horror Situation: Electrical attack
Reaction – Stunned Disbelief – The investigators document an electrical phenomenon above Old Man Scheckla. Power is knocked out

Demand: What are we dealing with, here?
Monster Reveal: Polaroids reveal the outline of Five being in the room.

Horror Situation: Evidence Review
Reaction – Try to solve it – Abby and the team review the recorded evidence in the Mobile Lab. EVP and Photo evidence is revealed.

Demand: The team reviews their EVP and Photo Evidence
Monster Reveal: Evidence separately reveals random words. When placed in order reveals a sinister message. (Example: “Trapped. We are waiting. First he suffers, then he dies. Kill them all.”

One of us killed:
Noelle (Monster Bait) is lured away and viciously attacked by an unseen presence.

Horror Situation: Phantom voices
Reaction – Try to solve it – Noelle is lured through the house by phantom voices.
Horror Situation: Banging Noises
Reaction – Try to Solve it – Noelle investigates the puzzle room.
Horror Situation: Jigsaw Puzzle
Reaction – Try to Solve it – Noelle witnesses puzzle pieces moving, forming words.
Horror Situation: Jigsaw Lady Attack
Reaction – Escape – Noelle attempts to flee, but she’s forcibly dragged back. She’s levitated and chocked by the Jigsaw Lady. Forced to read the message made by puzzle pieces. The group saves Noelle.

Demand: A mysterious clue is manifested.
Monster Reveal: Noelle is attacked in the jigsaw puzzle room and coughs up jigsaw puzzle pieces. When put together, it reveals an image of Haystack Rock and a series of numbers. (Office Safe Code)

MIDPOINT: The monster is worse than we thought!

Full pursuit by the killer:
The next morning the Professor arrives unannounced, sensing his team is in danger. (He’s psychic.) The attacks on the old man are determined to happen at low tide. The Investigators prepare for an experiment at low tide. The Wife attacks Old Man Scheckla.

Horror Situation: Energy Drain on Equipment
Reaction – Awe – The Wife draws energy from the investigators equipment to manifest herself. Battery powered lights die, batteries on equipment drain. Camera’s cut out. Pitch darkness.
Horror Situation: Corpuscular balls of light
Reaction – Try to solve it – Green balls of energy shoot across the room, from the back door to the wall above the Old Man.
Horror Situation: The Wife Attacks
Reaction – Escape – The Old Man is levitated out of bed and slapped and punched in midair. The house rumbles and objects begin pelting the old man from all directions. The worst beating yet.
Horror Situation: Full Torso Apparition
Reaction – Pure Fright – The Wife’s full appearance is revealed.

Barbara Scheckla disappears, along with her luggage and car. Her body will be found in the finale.

Character Death 2: Barbara Scheckla
Why: Old Man Scheckla learns that Barbara is an alcoholic and may have cheated on his son.
How: Barbara is lured away from the group and burned from the inside out. Her body is not found till the finale.

After reviewing the recorded evidence, the Professor reveals his theory about Poltergeists and Recurrent Spontaneous Psychokinesis. He’s seen it before. Abby’s childhood trauma is revealed. Abby: I did not kill my parents with psychokinesis!

Demand: The Professor’s Theory explained: Recurrent Spontaneous Psychokinesis
Monster Reveal: Abby’s backstory and the death of her mom is explained and how it ties together with what’s happening now. Explains how a poltergeist is manifested by a person with emotional psychokinesis.

Terrorized:
Al tucks Ellie into bed. They are at odds because they think Barbara has abandoned them. Barbara is not answering.

Abby and the Professor are at odds because they disagree on theory. The Professor suggests a radical experiment using the God Helmet to stimulate Abby’s pineal gland. To try and awaken her dormant psychic ability. Some believe the pineal gland to be the 3^rd eye. Reveals Abby’s repressed psychic ability. The experiment gives Abby a vision of the murders in the house, a hint of where the wife is buried and a secret door.

Demand: The “God Helmet – Pineal Gland Stimulation Experiment” unlocks Abby’s repressed psychic ability.
Monster Reveal: Gives Abby a vision of Five murder victims, a mysterious door, a cement pad with a date and handprints in the yard and the office safe.

Character Death 3: Pamela Scheckla – First Kill (flashback)
Why: She cheated on Old Man Scheckla.
How: With his hands. The kill is unplanned, sloppy and brutal.

Character Death 4: The Dragging Man – Second Kill (flashback)
Why: He was sleeping with Old Man Scheckla’s wife.
How: He was cut in half and the lower half of his body was destroyed. His upper body is made into a trophy and kept in the kill room basement. Revealed in finale.

Character Death 5: The Headless Woman – Third Kill (flashback)
Why: Old Man Scheckla has developed a taste for murder. He likes it.
How: Shotgun blast to the face. Her body is made into a trophy and kept in the kill room.

Character Death 6: The Jigsaw Lady – Fourth Kill (flashback)
Why: She was a married woman looking to cheat on her husband.
How: Her body is cut to pieces then put back together again. Her body is kept as a trophy in the kill room.

Character Death 7: Porcelain Doll Lady – Fifth Kill (flashback)
Why: She’s lured to the house by the Old Man. She has a love for porcelain dolls, like his wife.
How: She’s hung and slowly drained of blood. Her body is made into a Porcelain Doll and kept as a trophy in the kill room.

Demand: The Binder and an ornate key is found in the office safe.
Monster Reveal: Information on missing woman from the local area. Was Mrs. Scheckla’s lover a serial killer? Mr. Scheckla has been searching for his wife all this time?

The Old Man Reveals to Al and the group the story of his missing wife and her lover. A man, he thinks was a serial killer. The Key reminds Al of his fondest memory; making a time capsule with his father after his mom disappeared.

ACT 3 — FULL OUT HORROR

Fight to the death:
The group is lured in separate directions and trapped. It’s low tide and Al digs up the time capsule inside Haystack Rock. The Professor waits at the bottom of the attic stairs.

Horror Situation: Banging from the attic
Reaction – Try to solve it – Abby hears noises in the attic. Could it be Barbara?
Horror Situation: Creepy Attic
Reaction – Try to Solve it – Abby discovers a lot of luggage in the attic.
Horror Situation: Luggage reveal
Reaction: Confusion – The luggage is full of woman’s clothes. Abby finds Barbara’s luggage.
Horror Situation: Half body in a suitcase
Reaction – Escape – Abby discovers the body of the dragging man.
Horror Situation: Door Slam
Reaction – Escape – The attic door slams shut. It won’t open. They’re trapped.
Horror Situation: The Dragging Man attacks
Reaction – Escape – The Dragging Man crawls towards Abby.

Horror Situation: Creepy garage
Reaction – Try to solve it – Tommy searches the garage for more batteries.
Horror Situation: Grandpa’s stash
Reaction – Tempted – Tommy finds the old man’s bong.
Horror Situation: Tommy breaks his sobriety
Reaction – Guilt – Tommy places the bong to his lips and sparks a lighter.
Horror Situation: Bong/Gun Scare
Reaction – Shock – Noelle walks in and sees the gun in Tommy’s mouth.
Horror Situation: The Headless Woman attacks
Reaction – Escape – The Headless Woman yanks Tommy’s head back and averts the gun just as it goes off. The Headless Woman emerges from the shadows.
Horror Situation: Door Slam
Reaction – Terror – The garage door slams shut. Noelle and Tommy are trapped.

Horror Situation: Porcelain Doll Bedroom Attack
Reaction – Denial – Ellie hears the pitter patter of tiny feet. Nothing appears to have moved
Horror Situation: Porcelain dolls move
Reaction – Fear – More sounds of movement. Ellie shines her phone light. Dolls have moved. She hides under her blanket
Horror Situation – Dolls disappear
Reaction – Escape – Ellie peeks. The dolls have vanished! She runs towards the door.
Horror Situation: The Doll Lady attacks
Reaction – Escape – Ellie is attacked by the Porcelain Doll Lady. The Ghost starts to drag her under the bed.
Horror Situation – The Professor to the rescue
Reaction – Escape – The Professor pulls Ellie free and ushers her out the bedroom door.
Horror Situation: Door Slam
Reaction – Terror – The Bedroom door slams. The Professor is trapped.
Horror Situation: The Porcelain Woman attacks
Reaction – Terror – The Porcelain Woman emerges from the darkness, behind the Professor.

Horror Situation: Al digs up the Time Capsule.
Reaction – Hysteria – Al finds his mom’s body.

Hysteria:
Ellie follows the sound of the old man’s bell. Ellie and her grandpa are all alone. The Old Man leads her to a secret door to a hidden room below the house. The Old man is revealed to be a serial killer. The investigators are freed. The ghosts have actually trying help and protect them all along. Abby must talk the Old Man out of murder.

Horror Situation: Full Poltergeist Tantrum
Reaction – Escape – The entire house is a storm of paranormal activity.
Horror Situation: Secret Safe Space
Reaction – Hope – Grandpa knows of a safe place to hide.

The thrilling escape from death:
Ellie must help her grandfather to the office. The ghosts stalk their escape.

Horror Situation: The Secret Door
Reaction – Escape – The Old Man reveals a secret door to a staircase leading to a panic room.
Horror Situation: The Stairlift
Reaction – Maximum Terror – The stairlift descends slowly as the ghosts follow them down.
Horror Situation: The Panic Room Door
Reaction – Relief – Ellie slams the panic room door shut.

Demand: The Kill Room revealed.
Monster Reveal: Old Man Scheckla reveals his Kill Room, loaded with trophies from his murder victims.

Demand: The investigators are freed.
Monster Reveal: Al returns with grim news. The team puts it together that Old Man Scheckla is a serial killer.

Horror Situation: The Kill Room
Reaction – Escape – Abby confronts the Old Man, who’s taken Ellie hostage.

Horror Situation: The Kill Room
Reaction – Escape – Abby must convince the Old Man to let Ellie go.

Death returns to take one or more:
Old Man Scheckla has been returned to his bed. He’s in bad shape and no longer has the energy to manifest paranormal energy. The Investigators pack their equipment. Finally dying, Old Man Scheckla watches the sun set on Haystack Rock one last time and confesses his crimes. Al mercy kills his father. The last thing Old Man Scheckla see’s is his dead wife holding the pillow, surrounded by all his victims.

Demand: The fate of Mrs. Scheckla revealed.
Monster Reveal: Old Man Scheckla is revealed to have killed his wife and her lover in a fit of jealous rage. He hides the wife’s body in a time capsule that he and his son put together to help with the son’s grieving process. The son was not to open it until the old man was dead.

Character Death 8: Old Man Scheckla
Why: His son, Al learns of his crimes and that he had a hand in helping his father hide his mother’s body when he was a kid.
How: He’s smothered with a pillow, while the ghosts of his victims watch.

Resolution:

The mom’s body is recovered from Haystack Rock. The Professor and Abby reconcile and agree that they were both right. The entities were a psychic manifestation of the Old Man’s rage and guilt. But the mom could have been legitimate incarnate spirit. The Scheckla’s hold three funerals. Due to the publicity, the Investigators receive a call for a new case.

[Robert Smith]

Robert R. Smith’s Monster Reveal Track.

What I learned doing this assignment: Both from watching “The Thing” and doing the reveal track, I learned the rhythm of horror.

ASSIGHMENT 2 –

Create a Monster Reveal Track

Opening /Prologue

The monster self-transmits his power through a small gold nameplate engraved with the name of the demon Azazel. The Monster is Azazel.

(1) A lost goat is on the hill called Tel Esh-Shaytaneen (Hill of the Two Devils) and paws around a little in the sand. There is an explosion.

(2) The two goat-herding brothers, Hassan and Hussein, who had been looking for the goat, hear the explosion and come running and find the goat, to their horror dead and totally mangled. They also find the small gold nameplate, totally unaffected by the explosion. The goat’s pawing at it is what created the explosion.

ACT ONE: Locked into horror.

The brothers cannot read the name “Azazel” in ancient Hebrew letters but they know Dr. Colin Kendrick who is on a dig nearby, as they know it is an ‘antika’ they take it to him, trusting that Kendrick will make sense of it.

Monster reveal: The monster has destructive power that it can transmit from a distance through the Azazel nameplate.

Kendrick tells the two brothers that the word is the name of a demon angel, “Azazel” in Jewish tradition; Azazil in Arab-Muslim tradition. Although the brothers are reluctant to take Kendrick to the site where they found the Azazel nameplate, Kendrick insist that they do just that. At the location, Kendrick notices a cave opening higher up the craggy hill that has been sealed with stones. Although there is a warning sign that the cave is in danger of collapse, Kendrick begins to remove the stones. When he removes the first stone and gets an aperture to the cave’s interior, he peers in and sees nothing. But a moment later a streak of lightning fires from the cave through the aperture and kills Hussein.

Monster reveal: The monster is an unseen killer who can release his deadly power at will.

During Act One: The party is locked into horror.

Monster reveals: The monster communicates and hypnotically draws people to do its will at a distance through the gold Azazel nameplate.

Kendrick plans to return to Tel Esh-Shaytaneen and excavate the cave but calls Dr. Clement Leroux in Paris who left the warning sign in front of the cave. Leroux warns Kendrick to keep away from the site. Two members of his archaeological expedition mysteriously died or were murdered. Kendrick tells Leroux about the goat and Hussein’s death and that he has in his possession the Azazel gold nameplate. Leroux tells him to destroy it. He tells Kendrick that he is the one who threw it away in the sand now he wishes he had buried it in concrete.

Monster reveal: The nameplate has a mind of its own – the mind of Azazel.

Kendrick places the nameplate on the table while speaking with (protagonist) Ned Garner. It vibrates like a cell phone. This ends up compelling the group (Kendrick, Ned, Bob Barton, and Kaitlyn to mount the expedition rather than abandon the idea. .

The expedition proceeds. Upon entering the cave they discover that it is a tomb contianing the headless mummy of King Cushan Rishathaim, a villain in the Bible (Judges 8), whose name means Cushan the Doubly-Evil. They further discover a mummified head, obviously the head of Cushan

Monster reveal: The monster, Azazel the desert demon, finally speaks after Kendrick inserts the Azazel nameplate into the mouth of the mummified head. Azazel now spiritually possesses the mummified head and speaks. It is a Toreph, as Kendrick suspected, a skull used in Biblical times for necromancy and divination, animated when a demon’s name on a nameplate is inserted in its mouth, under its tongue, according to ancient sources.

Azazel also erects an invisible barrier to trap Kendrick and his party in the cave.

Monster reveal: The monster (Azazel) Toreph can summon demonic apparitions of the dead.

Azazel summons the spirit of Hussein the slain brother of Hassan, who is present. Hussein’s ghost calls and beckons Hassan to join him in the afterlife. Hassan grabs the gun of Bob Barton and shoots himself.

Monster limitation: Azazel is limited only to the cave tomb.

Monster reveal: Although confined, Azazel makes use of the limiting space of the cave. He has an invisible shield which protects him from gunfire and has control over the trajectory of bullets.

Act Two:

Bob Barton takes his gun back from Hassan’s lifeless hand and fires at the Toreph skull inhabited by Azazel, but the bullets ricochet and mortally wound Kendrick who, before dying, says extract the gold name plate and Azazel will be gone.

Monster weakness: Azazel’s spirit possession of the skull depends upon the presence of the Azazel nameplate being in his mouth.

MIDPOINT: THE MONSTER IS WORSE THAN WE THOUGHT.

ACT 3 – Solving the Puzzle.

Before Kendrick dies, he advises Ned to take the nameplate out of the skull’s mouth.

Kendrick dies. As Ned has no weapon, he can walk through the invisible shield. He grabs the mummified head and extracts the Azazel nameplate. Azazel instantly departs the mummified head as if he was exorcised. With him the invisible shields vanish. The cave may now be exited.

Ned, Bob Barton, and Kaitlyn rejoin the mummified head with the headless mummy of King Cushan in the clay sarcophagus.

Ned pockets the Azazel nameplate.

One final kill.

Monster reveal: Azazel has taken possession of the headless mummy of King Cushan’ mummy rejoined with his head, and he explodes out of the clay sarcophagus and follows Ned, Bob, and Kaitlyn while they attempt to flee the cave.

After exiting the cave, Ned climbs above, waits for the Azazel-possessed mummy of Cushan to exit the cave below him and pushes the bolder off the cliff and crushes the mummy. However, Azazel, speaking through the mummy, possesses Ned and causes the cave to collapse, crushing Ned with it. But Ned resurrects, possessed by Azazel and carrying the Azazel nameplate.

Monster reveal: Azazel possesses Ned. So, it looks like the lead (Ned) has survived but only because Azazel survives by possessing him.

This sets up the sequel.

[Deborah Daughetee]

Deborah’s Monster Reveal Track

What I learned during this assignment is to find the moments that will really lead my characters on their journey toward the ultimate end.

MONSTERS

Powers: There are no supernatural kind of powers. I have several monsters that are hybrids between humans and other alien species. The true power of these monsters is to instill horror because of what they are. Physically, they are a threat because of their size and weapons like razor-sharp claws.

The limitations are that these creatures are transplants, neither one nor the other. They can become confused, sometimes recognizing what has happened. These monsters are not only horrific, but they are also heartbreaking because they are created by the true monster.

Weaknesses: The greatest weakness is an implant that controls the hybrids and animates them can be disabled.

Purpose: These monsters serve the Reptilian Princess. They are to attack, kill and/or take humans back for experimentation.

The strength of the Reptilian Princess is her intelligence.

Her weakness is her belief in her superiority and in human’s inferior minds.

Purpose: to create formidable warriors for the Queen.

SEQUENCE

ACT ONE – SET UP FOR HORROR

Atmosphere of Evil established:

Horror Situation: A man is running through a forest with something big chasing him. We don’t see what it is, but the man is terrorized.

Reaction Escape: He hides in the hollow of a tree, pulling branches in front of the opening. He tries to quiet her breathing, listening as hard as she can for the monster.

Horror Situation: Suddenly the tree is sheared off.

Character Death: He is torn apart.

Why: Foreshadow horror.

DEMAND: Intrigue. What is this Man Running From?

Monster Reveal: The tree us sheared off, the man pulled out and blood splashes

Connect with Characters

Our characters are on a spacebus headed for a hollow asteroid, where a handful of scientists and military men are already stationed. We get to know each character and why they are headed to the asteroid.

The pilot are concerned because there is no response from the asteroid.

Denial of Horror

The Senator says that there are a lot of reasons this could happen. He over turns all objections and orders the pilot to take the closer. The pilot is about to refuse, when the ship is sucked in.

Safety Taken Away

Horror Situation: Suddenly something hits them, and they are sucked inside.

Reaction-Escape: our hero works with hero pilot to bring the ship to a crash landing, preventing it from being taken wherever it was supposed to be.

Horror Situation: They find the remains of some kind of alien beast.

Reaction-Denial: With the robot leading, they hiked through the forest to base camp where they will find help.

DEMAND: What sucked them inside? Where are the people who were supposed to be there?

Monster Reveal: The remains of an alien beast is found. But it looks all wrong, obviously surgically altered.

Monster: The nature of the beast

Horror Situation: The group finds the base. There is obvious evidence of horrors that took place here. Some blood. Barricaded room that has been broken into, etc. There are no bodies.

Reaction: The military set watches, the rest try to sleep, but are haunted by what went down here and what it means to them.

DEMAND: Tension Heightened. What happened to these people? Will the same thing happen to our characters? Where are all the bodies?

Monster Reveal: The blood bath at the base and no bodies found.

Act 2 – THE POINT OF NO RETURN

Isolated/Trapped/Abducted:

Horror Situation: Pilot finds a shuttle that could take them all away. He and the father get it working, then he takes it for a test run.

Death: The pilot hits a force field, and his ship breaks into pieces. They run to the ship but can’t find his body.

Why: Establish isolation, danger, and intelligence behind what is happening to them.

Reaction: They discuss the fact that they have all missed checking in with earth forces and that they will be coming to rescue them. They need to find a way to stay safe from whatever got the others.

DEMAND: Hope. Find a Way off the asteroid and get back to earth.

Monster Reveal: The pilot hits a force field, and his ship explodes.

Horror Situation: The “Sky” becomes opaque giving our cast a glimpse of the stars. Then suddenly the stars are moving in a blur—the asteroid is leaving orbit, leaving the solar system.

Reaction: Panic. They are trapped with no help coming. The senator becomes is obnoxious and thinks he should be in charge.

DEMAND: Deflate any hope. There will be no rescue from earth.

Monster Reveal: The asteroid streaks out of the solar system.

One of us is killed.

Horror Situation: The monster shows up. It is a hybrid alien beast with the head of the woman in the teaser. This is Mae’s husband, and she is so terrorized by this that she can’t run, can’t do anything. The monster’s head recognizes Mae for a moment, and in a forced, terrifying voice says, “Mae. Run.”

Death: Mae is scooped up by a claw and taken away.

Why: Frozen by terror and horror seeing her husband in this way. Enhances Horror.

Reaction: The others escape.

DEMAND: Increase horror and terror

Monster Reveal: A crab-like alien body with the head of Mae’s husband, the man from the teaser.

ACT THREE – FULL OUT HORROR

Fight to the death

Horror Situation: The monster finds them again. They fight and are able to kill it.

Reaction: They are relieved, the monster is dead.

DEMAND: There is an intelligence behind this. That monster was made by something else.

Monster Reveal: The monster attacks again, but is easily killed this time. They examine how it was made.

Horror Situation: Another monster appears made out of parts of the pilot they all know! This monster is smarter, more deadly.

Death of Character: The senator is torn apart.

Why: A character flaw. He’s so deeply in denial, he tries to negotiate with the intelligence to get them to stop the monster. He thinks he too important to kill.

Andre shoots him before he can be taken away, to save Ian from facing the horror of his father becoming a monster.

The fight to the death of the pilot now happens.

DEMAND: They have to find the intelligence. The robot will lead them.

Monster Reveal: Another hybrid monster attacks. They are attacked by another hybrid monster. This one has an arm with the tattoo of the pilot. All of the “feet” of this centipede like creature are arms and hands. The head is like that of a fish-like creature with a wide mouth and rows of needle-like teeth. They are able to kill this monster with no deaths.

Hysteria

Reaction: Eboni tries to comfort a disconsolate Ian. Sabina has a complete breakdown. Pen tries to comfort her. The military set up a perimeter. The robot disappears and the military now suspect he is infected or is a turncoat and is otherwise bad. Sabrina fights for it.

The thrilling escape from death:

Horror Situation: Eboni gets separated from the group and is attacked by a monster made from Mae. But this monster seems conflicted but forced to kill. Eboni uses her brain to bring put up a flare for her father and the others to follow. They come.

Character Death: Sly, who sacrifices himself to save Ian. The monster would take him, but Andre kills him, and the monster drops him and retreats.

Why: It increases the Horror. Plus, he’s a beloved character.

DEMAND: Discovery. All of these monsters have one weakness in common… A place on their bodies where there is an implant that animates and controls them.

Monster Reveal: Monster made from Mae. She hesitates in killing Eboni.

Character Death: Sabina. She backs into a second monster, made from all alien parts and is taken away.

Why: She makes a bad decision by choosing to photograph the interaction with the monster and Sly’s sacrifice.

DEMAND: The rules have changed. Two monsters instead of one.

Monster Reveal: The discovery above works on both monsters, may all.

Reaction: Robot returns with news she has found the intelligence behind the hybrids. People don’t want to trust her. He talks about experiments human conduct on animals. That’s going on here except they are the animals. Stop the scientist and you stop the hybrid monsters.

They follow the robot into a part of the asteroid that actually looks like a ship. There are computers, etc. Sabrina helps the robot to jack into the ship and she begins to shut down life support for the reptilian aliens.

Horror Situation: They find where the monsters were created and see pieces of humans still alive. They kill them all. Then there’s a fight for control of the ship.

DEMAND: The horror of butcher shop and the terror in all aliens trapped.

Monster Revealed: There is the head of someone trying to talk to them.

Death returns to take one more.

Horror Situation:

Death: The formidable female Reptilian slashes at Eboni’s neck, then escapes in the equivalent of an alien shuttle.

Why: She is the most beloved character, and it is unexpected. The death of innocence.

Resolution:

Reaction: Andre, Pen and Ian survive along with the Robot. They are hurtling through space on the way to who knows where.

Resurrection of character: The robot downloaded Eboni into itself. In essence, Eboni survived. However, she and the robot’s consciousness are merging into one.

DEMAND: Solve the Mystery and confront the real monster.

Monster Reveal: The reptilian princess kills Eboni and escapes in a ship.

Horror Situation:

Eboni and the robot are also plugged into the alien technology, which changes them more. While it seems the essence of Eboni has stayed the same, there is an alien intelligence awake. It finds hidden creatures and sets them free into the world outside the bunker. Is this mercy, or a continuation of the experience?

Why: Bring hope and tension to the end of the story.

DEMAND: What happens now?

Monster Reveal: Eboni/Robot/Alien Tech let all of the caged aliens go. Is this mercy or is the start of another experiment?

[PAMELA Raymond]

Pamela’s Monster Reveal Track

What I learned doing this assignment is…?

Layering the reveal into the previous assignments gives a good indication of where more monster action or more distress needs to be added to the screenplay.

1. Create each part of this model:

A. Who is your monster and what is their terror?

Powers
– inhabit the mind, control behavior of the individual
Limitations
– cannot enter children or individuals who are child like
Weaknesses
– certain incantations will reveal it and then it can be killed
Plan/Purpose/Appetite
– lustful and mercurial, Carras endeavors to cover up his relationship
with a mortal and is willing to kill her and anyone else to do it

B. Sequence the reveals.

· Care Center emerges in the first part of the story when Sybil escapes them 10 years prior

· A being is introduced after the school is locked down and kills Marie

· The group begins to think that the being is a part of one of them when some start experiencing weird thoughts and recurring memories in Act I

· A being, maybe Care Center maybe not, introduced when Jacob and Jill are killed and Principal LaPierre is found dead in Act II

· The group becomes more paranoid and singles out Marcus for persecution in Act III

· Something possess Carmel and the group knows that there is a being among them

· Terrance reveals himself to be a being from the Care Center and begins his assault on the remaining survivors

· When the main action recedes, Carmel finally shows the viewer she is one of the Care Center and camouflaged among the survivors

C. Create Demand for each clue/reveal.

2. Lay that over your current outline and fill in each clue/reveal using the tag “Monster Reveal:.”

ACT 1 – SET UP FOR HORROR

Atmosphere of Evil established: Sybil runs for her life in the back swamps of Louisiana

Horror Situation: What she is running from finds her in a desolate rural church. Closing and locking the door behind her before seeing the herbs, amulets, and roughly stitched sac cloth doll. She had run right directly into Carras, not away.

Monster Reveal: a powerful being is in pursuit and employs amulets, dolls, and herbs to overpower its prey

Reaction – Escape: Sybil is terrified but not surprised at what is coming for her. She passes out as the Care Center surrounds her, their eyes disappearing, and their large muscular hands pull at her arms.

Monster Reveal: it has a human like form that transforms itself, no eyes and enlarged hands used to subdue and possibly kill its prey

Horror Situation: A loud screech is heard, and the priest stands at the back of the church. The priest saves her but loses his soul.

Connect with the characters: 10 Years Later: Teachers and staff at a Louisiana elementary school are preparing for a hurricane and Sybil is a teacher at the school which is an evacuation center. The main core cast of teachers (Coach Ogilvy, Sybil, Clara, Carmel, Marie, Marcus, and Principal LaPierre) agree to do it. Jacob and Jill watch the news and roll a joint and determine if getting locked in the school could be an economic windfall for them

The characters are warned not to do it: Many of the teachers are not staying to man the evacuation. In this area, folks are known for taking care of their own and waiting out a storm rather than running from it which is what they deem the evacuation center to be.

Denial of Horror: A small group stay at the school for their own various and mysterious reasons.

Safety taken away: The principal is concerned about looters, so he has the doors chained shut. The windows are nailed with thick boards and industrial nails making an easy escape not possible.

Horror Situation: As the storm rages, electricity goes in and out, and several people in the group experience very specific and personal reliving of traumas in their past.

Monster Reveal: The being can induce those affected by its power to experience disorienting thoughts and recurring tragic or frightening memories to disarm them and make them more pliable to its infiltration

Reaction – The members of the group experiencing the memories start to make them jumpy and agitated in a way that unsettles the rest of the crew.

ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN

Isolated / Trapped / Abducted: Without the key to open the chains (the boards used industrial strength nails that secure into brick and concrete) they must think of another way out.

Horror Situation: The key holder if found dead and is the only one with the combination to the safe holding the key. She is found facing a boarded window with bloody scratch marks in the wooden boards, her face contorted, eyes gone (laying at her knees) with an open mouth midscream.

Reaction: It isn’t safe to go outside in the storm but it isn’t safe to stay in the building. The remaining group is scared and panicking.

Horror Situation: Finger pointing and paranoia set in with the remaining people.

Reaction: The heightened fear causes factions to break away for the rest of the group making it easier for the Care Center to target them but more difficult for anyone to know who a danger is and who is going to be helpful.

Monster Reveal: The being can cause paranoia in its targets and cause a very real human reaction of making poor judgements and dividing the group physically and emotionally from one another

Horror Situation: the next victims as they try to take advantage of the chaos to pilfer electronics from the 2nd grade classroom. They are found in the cleaning closet, eyes gone, with herbs, amulets, and sac cloth stitched doll held between them

Character Death: The two are found in the cleaning closet, eyes gone, with herbs, amulets, and sac cloth stitched doll held between them. Principal LaPierre is found in the swimming pool filled with blood instead of water.

Monster Reveal: The being can cause physical injuries as well as psychic injuries.

ACT 3 — FULL OUT HORROR

Isolated / Trapped / Abducted: Coach Ogilvy suspects Marcus is the killer because he refused to work with the group. The group (Sybil, Carmel, Ogilvy, Potter, Marie, and the children) locks him in a broom closet.

Horror Situation: Carmel begins acting strangely, acting out and contorting. Sybil remembers the priest who saved her said the word – Ouanga.

Reaction: Carmel becomes herself again. She is able to tell the group about the Care Center and then asks Sybil why she didn’t warn them. The remaining group is divided about how Sybil plays into this. Sybil tries to defend her standing by disclosing who the Care Center is, but she doesn’t tell them they want her because of Carras.

Horror Situation: After the team creates amulets to do the hex, they find Marcus in the closet and use it on him. Nothing happens. Then Terrance starts yelling and his eyes disappear, and his hands become big, and he reveals himself as a member of the Care Center.

Monster Reveal: Incantations with specific words can summon the being to reveal true form

Reaction: They make a run for the roof and into the storm. Terrance finds them and sets his sights on the children.

Horror Situation: Terrance finds them and sets his sights on the children. Marie steps in front and sacrifices herself. As it goes for Sybil and Carmel, Ogilvy taunts the monster and with word Ouanga but it doesn’t work this time. Ogilvy is knocked unconscious.

Character Death: Potter makes a last effort to stab him with a crowbar but is tossed from the roof.

Monster Reveal: The being can interact physically with a mortal human and cause injury or death

Death returns to take one or more – The Care Center monster skewers Ogilvy with a large hand and rips out his intestines. Ogilvy transforms into Carras. The Care Center was there for Carras all along because he broke the rules. The Care Center takes Carras and returns to wherever the Care Center resides.

Monster Reveal: The being has more than one faction in operation – one that is trying to secure another being and one trying to cause chaos, mayhem, and death

Resolution – as the sun comes up and military aquatic vehicles come to take the survivors to safety, Sybil believes it is over. Carmel has a look in her eyes as her eyes disappear.

[Anthony McBride]

Lesson 7

Tony McBride Monster Reveal Track

What I learned doing this assignment is that I can enhance the quality of my horror script through Monster Reveals.

ASSIGNMENT 1:

Watch the movie THE THING. As you do, keep the example in front of you where I gave you the Components of the Monster and the list of Monster Reveals.

This will prepare to create your own Monster Reveal Track.

ASSIGNMENT 2

Take these steps to create your Monster Reveal Track.

1. Create each part of this model:

A. Who is your monster and what is their terror? The monster was the ghost of a raped and killed girl who possessed the body of a dead person.

• Powers?

The ability to create holograms and use them to kill people.

• Limitations?

She can only work within the confines of the house and its boundaries.

• Weaknesses?

The monster is weak towards being loved.

• Plan/Purpose/Appetite?

Annabelle wants to kill everyone who ever hurt her because she died cruelly of rape and homicide. She won’t stop until all are dead.

B. Sequence the reveals.

-Powers / Limitations / Weaknesses / Plan, Purpose, Appetite

C. Create Demand for each clue/reveal.

-As the monster attacks, answers are needed to find clues to defeat the monster.

2. Lay that over your current outline and fill in each clue/reveal using the tag “Monster Reveal:.”

Create your plot.

• Knowing your concept, fill in one or two sentences for each of the plot points.

o The college friends arrive at the manor.

o The monster kills the first friend.

ACT 1 — SET UP FOR HORROR

Horror Situation: Haunted House – Denial

• Character Death 2: Man/Sacrificial Lamb

• Why: It increases the horror

• How: Back into it

• Atmosphere of Evil established: A haunted mansion is shown.

• Connect with the characters: College friends shown reuniting.

• Denial of Horror: The husband assures the family that this is going to be a fun adventure.

• Safety taken away: The friends experience accidents one-by-one.

Monster Reveal: The ability to create holograms and use them to kill people.

• Monster: Annabella.

• Character Death 1: Husband

• Why: They made a bad decision

• How: Attempt something that fails

ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN

Horror Situation: Lost – Escape

Horror Situation: Hallucinating – Denial

• Isolated / Trapped / Abducted: The friends are faced with moments from their past then some are killed by accident. Some of the friends go into town to find help and answers.

• One of us killed: The husband is killed by being crushed.

MIDPOINT: The monster is worse than we thought!

Horror Situation: Monster Approaching – Fight/ Escape

Horror Situation: See Another Killed – Hide/ Try to Solve It

• Character Death 3: Woman/Complainer

• Why: A character flaw that compels them to take the wrong action.

• How: Give Up

• Terrorized

Monster Reveal: She can only work within the confines of the house and its boundaries.

ACT 3 — FULL OUT HORROR

Horror Situation: See Another Killed – Hide/ Try to Solve It

Horror Situation: Chased – Escape/ Fight

• Character Death 4: Man/Rescuer

• Why: The character is in denial.

• How: Sacrificed

• Full pursuit by the killer: Annabelle pursues the friends with various weapons but doesn’t manage to kill anyone.

The monster is weak towards being loved.

Monster Reveal: The monster is weak towards being loved.

• Fight to the death: The friends gather weapons of their own and fight to the death.

• Hysteria: The friends are running throughout the house trying to avoid all traps and turns.

• The thrilling escape from death: Annabelle corners one of the friends but the other splashes her with oil.

• Death returns to take one or more.: Annabelle takes the life of the hippie.

• Resolution: The friends unite instead of bickering to defeat Annabelle.

Monster Reveal: The monster was the ghost of a raped and killed girl who possessed the body of a dead person.

Monster Reveal: Annabelle wants to kill everyone who ever hurt her because she died cruelly of rape and homicide. She won’t stop until all are dead.

[Patrick Malone]

Patrick Malone Monster Reveal Track

What I learned was to reveal the monster in increments. And to have the victims gradually come to some understanding of the monster and how to stop or kill it.

Who or what the is the monster?

The Amaruga is huge humanoid creature that lives in the wild areas of the Deep South.

What are its powers?

It can travel on walk on land, and live in water.

It can propel its power by wind and create mini twisters.

The twisters can rip skin off.

Each hand has three fingers with long dagger like claws that can impale

It has two rows of razor-sharp teeth, and 4 fangs.

What are its limitations?

Must stay within a limited area close to the hidden gold.

What are its weaknesses?

Fire

What is its Plan/Purpose/Appetite?

It works with Sergeant Johnson to protect the gold.

Johnson allows it to eat gold shavings and to eat the bodies of their victims.

The gold has prolonged Johnson’s life.

Opening/prologue:

Demand: Intrigue: After the ambush attack, Confederate Sergeant Johnson glimpses a horrendous creature eating a corpse.

<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Monster Reveal: What is this creature?

During 1st Act:

Demand: Tammy warns Clark about rumors of a strange creature and missing people.

Monster Reveal: Intrigue, concern, is there any truth to the rumors?

Demand: A strange but seemingly friendly forest woman gives them directions.

Monster Reveal: Ollie and Tammy sense there is something ‘off’ about this woman.

Demand: Their compass spins wildly.

Monster Reveal: Unnatural event. They argue about which direction to go.

Demand: The forest woman stares at the sky.

Monster Reveal: Sergeant Johnson stares at the sky, nods as if receiving a message. He enters a cave where there are huge three-toed footprints in the dirt. He speaks and an unnatural animal voice responds.

Demand: At the site of the 1864 ambush, Bill finds 2 gold coins.

Monster Reveal: Bill pockets the coins. Snakes and insects are attracted to him.

Demand: Grant’s group meets the forest woman; she gives the same directions.

Monster Reveal: When she enters her cabin, she transforms from middle age to an ancient hag.

Demand: Clark’s group has trouble building a campfire, it keeps getting extinguished.

Monster Reveal: There is something unnatural in the air.

1st Act turning point:

Demand: Clark’s group discovers the mangled body of Victor Lennox (of Grant’s group).

Monster Reveal: There are huge three-toed footprints by the body.

1st half of 2nd Act: The
monster is present, but hidden.

Demand: Tammy observes Grant’s group having trouble starting a camp fire. Fred Dickson who stole the 2 gold coins from Bill is now pestered by snakes and insects.

Monster Reveal: The coins are attracting a negative force.

Demand: A mini twister hits Grant’s camp. Horrendous animal sounds are heard. Fred Dickson is terrified. He runs screaming into the forest.

Monster Reveal: A pair of glowing green orbs move towards Fred. Body parts are flung into the camp.

Demand: Clark’s group finds Grant’s camp destroyed. Body parts litter the area.

Monster Reveal: Only a monster could do this. It’s unnatural.

Demand: As Clark sets up camp, someone sees the glowing green orbs in the forest.

Monster Reveal: Is this the monster?

Midpoint: Monster is
worse than we thought

Demand: Clark’s camp fire mysteriously goes out. Then a mini twister tears the camp apart. Clark is thrown through the air and against a tree.

Monster Reveal: The Amaruga reveals itself. Ollie shoots it several times, it retreats unharmed

2nd half of 2nd Act: Monster
pursuing / attacking characters,

Demand: Clark is incensed and rushes off to find Tammy.

Monster Reveal: A nest of snakes take Clark down. Amaruga kills him. Emmet runs away.

3rd Act: Characters
solve the puzzle and fight back, apparently killing monster

Demand: Grant, Max and Tammy hike along edge of lake.

Monster Reveal: The water bubbles, Amaruga surfaces a distance from shore. They run. Tammy gets stuck in quicksand; the men leave her behind

Demand: Grant and Max run toward where they believe the gold is hidden.

Monster Reveal: They hear the thud of the monster’s footsteps pursuing them.

Demand: Ollie follows a passage in the cave that may lead to the gold. He is attacked by Grant and knocked unconscious.

Monster Reveal: Amaruga appears and goes after Grant.

Demand: Grant exits the cave and is pursued by Amaruga.

Monster Reveal: Amaruga creates a mini twister that tears Grant’s skin off. It then rips him to shreds.

Demand: Ollie sneaks out of cave and runs. Max shoots at him.

Monster Reveal: Amaruga spears Max with its claw and dives into lake drowning Max.

Demand: Ollie comes across Tammy; she survived the quicksand.

Monster Reveal: They have a long pursuit by Amaruga.

Demand: Tammy realizes that fire can harm or kill Amaruga.

Monster Reveal: Just as Amaruga gets close they attack it with fire. It burns and runs off.

Resolution: Survivors
live…but somehow, the monster is still alive for the sequel.

Ollie, Bill and Tammy survive and make it home.

Demand: Sergeant Johnson shaves slivers of gold and sprinkles them on his food.

Monster Reveal: He also sets out larger pieces for Amaruga. He tells Amaruga this will restore its health.