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David’s Show Empathy/Distress
What I learned doing this assignment is the necessity of creating deep empathy and distress for your characters. It’s a vital ingredient to a show’s success- the more, the better.
ASSIGNMENT ONE: RIVERDALE empathy/distress
1. Jason’s murder rocks the town
2. Generational blood fued between Cheryl’s parents and Betty’s
3. Archie forced to choose football or music
4. Veronica moves into town, a pariah due to her dad
5. Jughead’s dad framed for murder
6. Archie ruins relationships, his parents divorced
7. Jughead has no where to live
ASSIGNMENT TWO: FALL RUSH
A. Undeserved misfortune. Steve cheats on Emily. Steve suspended for year. Emily’s fired from job. Dean sabotages her plan to start sorority. Mean sorority girls make fun of Emily. Lindsay’s estranged from her.
B. External Character conflicts. Emily and the dean battle over control of the house. Steve and Emily separate. Emily and Lindsay don’t communicate. Emily and mean sorority girls. Unintentional: Lindsay gets caught up in her struggles.
C. Plot intruding on life. Her class is difficult and she’s been out of school for 20 years. Her boss is a tyrant who ends up firing her. The dean does everything in her power to get the house back. A professor flirts with her. The sorority has only one member, is failing.
D. Moral dilemmas. Should Emily serve girls alcohol? Should they retaliate against the dean/other sororities? Should she give Steve another chance? Should she quit her job/find a new one? Should she date her professor?
E. Forced decisions they’d never make. Stand up to Madison in class. Tell off her boss. Ridicule the dean. Go after the other sororities. Throw parties to spite the dean, other sororities. Tell Steve to fuck off.
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R. Reid Jr’s TV Pitch Bible Investigation Module 2 assignment 7
What I learned from this assignment is how my information can be readily available for me to make documents, like my pitch bible or assemble my rough drafts to add to any question being asked.
THE CURRENT DRAFT of your TV Pitch Bible hopefully looks like this:
Page 1
SIGMA 2619, SCI-FI ACTION, DRAMEDY
INTRIGUING CONCEPT
1. Present your Concept.
• A. Engaging and highly proactive hero who is an Alien sent to retrieve some stolen tech that alters minds.
• B. Bruce is up against a major conflict of being a fish out of water new on SIGMA 2619/Earth and doesn’t know who to trust since going through a space vortex to travel here has render his memory foggy.
• C. Bruce goes on unique transformational journey of new person when he goes after the tech.
• D. We are drawn into an intriguing world that is fast-paced and ever-changing moment to moment world that keeps you guessing.
2. Tell us the World of this show.
• Unique Sub-World: An Alien that is hunting a technology that is deemed too dangerous to be allowed to stay on earth known by off-worlders as SIGMA 2619.
• Previously unexplored: the chase of the tech by a fish out of water tech hunter.
• The unknown: who to be trusted: the agents looking for the tech as well.
• The unseen: Who is the Mystery woman who has been holding the tech.
• Unheard of Dangers: that the Alien once caught by the agents might have to use the help of the Mystery woman (the enemies of my enemies).
• Reason to explore it: When the Alien is put in a bind to trust the help from the Mystery woman. We can see if the Alien/Bruce can learn more about who he thinks is his enemy might turn into a useful ally.
and formatConcept (Mod 1 pre-lesson, Mod 2 Lesson 1)World (Mod 1 pre-lesson, Mod 2 Lesson 1)
Show Summary (Lesson 6)
An alien is sent to earth and doesn’t know who to trust as he hunts for THE TECH, a technology that needs to be retrieved from dangerous people who may be using it to control the minds of humans, giving them skills to rob banks and wiping their minds when they are caught. A mysterious woman is accidentally discovered near and around each one of these incidents by a pair agents who are hot on her trail only they don’t know her next move.
As Bruce takes on SIGMA 2619’s custom he is tracing the residue left after THE TECH is used that leads him to a bar where he tries to take on local SIGMA 2619 habits, but this night is unlike any other with Bruce as he faces a college frosh week challenge and thinks he can outdrink humans in a human body without eating for two days that quickly falls flat and mixing in a state-allowed marijuana blunt called the “super” Susan result in a wacky trip into Bruce subconscious where the woman he is hunting stands next to him but being under the influence he thinks it is a dream never drank or smoked before that he is really the person who had THE TECH to start with and he sent this mysterious woman to get it.
Hearing a pounding he wakes up in a girl’s frat dorm not knowing what was real and what was not real. And outside the agents he was following that gave him the info about the Mysterious woman are now knocking outside the frat dorm he has woken up in. This is the end of the first season/pilot.
Page 2 – 4Character Descriptions (Lesson 2)
Who is the character? He is the alien who comes to earth/aka SIGMA 2619.
Role in the show? He comes to Earth to get TECH that was stolen.
Noteworthy traits Intriguing history: Intrigue? the main character memory has been wiped but he still has a few traits like “stealth” and advanced fighting skills. But it is a mystery what he did before to result with a wiped out memory.
The intrigue is watching him operate like a fish out of water.
Mystery? Who is the Mysterious woman who holds the TECH and what does she want as people around her are doing her bidding to commit crimes and then quickly have no knowledge of the crimes or the time during the crimes.
How do they support or drive the conflict with others?
Bruce is opposed the woman he is hunting down and stay away from the 2 agents who are hunting down the Mysterious woman the TECH itself. it is unclear if they are good or bad.
Irony — Opposites or paradoxes that exist with the character Opposing agendas/etc. that naturally causes conflict with other charactersUnpredictable?Intriguing relationship with one or more characters.
-Bruce is on the trail of the TECH and the Mysterious woman and him cross paths only she tells him that they know each other while he is waiting for SNOWY to return from the bathroom. She is the first victim and he has to stay with her to find out what happened to her.
START: (Present the character as someone we can relate to.)
Bruce is a fish out of water and clearly he needs help but her isn’t a menacing person and won’t commit crimes to get what he wants. He seem patient to start his journey on Earth/SIGMA 2619
MIDDLE: (Conflict, intrigue, and issues.)
He starts off trying to do things on his own but quickly finds he is in over his head. He also discovers there are two special agents looking for the TECH and also a MYSTERIOUS woman who was close to the site of the crimes.
ENDING: (A final punchline that hooks us and sends us into the future of the story.)
-The Mysterious woman tells BRUCE that he is the one who sent the TECH to EARTH 2619 and that they do indeed know each other because he was the one who sent her to earth in the first place.
Page 5 – 7Episode Descriptions (Lesson 4 and 5)
1. Beginning…Bruce an alien with no memory besides basic skills and a mission is sent to earth Season End/Cliffhanger…and it ends with the Mysterious woman he has been chasing saving his life
• Question A: What is the Beginning of the season and the End of the season?
• Question B: What possible cliffhanger could be in that last scene of the season, thus demanding that we watch the next season?
By Bruce having the person he has been chasing saving his life or his life is her hands puts us on the edge of our seats.
2. Season 1 Mystery Set up The Mysterious woman saying Bruce has been here to Earth/Sigma 2619 before.…………………………………..………………Season 1 Mystery Solved Clues indicate that Bruce has been here before, but he only gets it in clues he finds and instances of his memory that he can’t fully trust.
• Question A: What is the mystery?
• Question B: How could the mystery be set up? What parts will be left out that must be solved?
Having Bruce recall certain things in bits of flashes as he goes places or meets people. Like going to a place for the first time where SNOWY has been brainwashed is familiar to Bruce as if he has been there before.
• Question C: What it the ultimate solution that the characters must work to discover?
Bruce can choose to trust the Mysterious woman’s words that he has been to Earth/Sigma before. But that messes with his handlers thinking or instructing him on Earth/Sigma and his lack of adjustment.
3. Journey begins when he arrives on Earth/Sigma 2619 hot on trial of the emission of the TECH being used. Journey peaks when he runs into the agents also looking for the TECH but they have a different goal: they don’t know about the TECH as they are hunting the woman using the TECH.
• Question A: Where does the Lead Character journey begin and end for this season?
Bruce begins his journey as he arrives on earth and ends with the Mysterious woman saving his life and telling him he has been here before.
• Question B: Think about where this character goes in future seasons. That might give you an idea also.
4. ……Layer Bruce arrives on Earth/Sigma 2619
….…Layer Bruce’s own memory is a bit foggy, he thinks it is from the trip to come to Earth/Sigma or the earth it’s self that is having an affect on him.
………Layer Bruce traces the TECH he is looking for to a Mysterious woman.
………Layer Agents from Earth/Sigma are also looking for the Mysterious woman
………Layer Bruce runs into one of the victims who lost her memory. He gives her sage advice not knowing she was a victim and thought she was on a life-journey.
..……Layer One of the Agents looks to get a promotion at the expense of procedure and looks to get results in anyway possible, even with the a life taken if necessary.
………Layer The Mysterious woman proves hard to catch and she is dangerous too if she uses the tech on unsuspecting victims. But her motive is unclear.
……Layer Bruce seems to be caught in a trap that would show him to be know about the TECH a lot more than he seems and blowing his cover but the MYSTERIOUS Woman saves him and tells him he has been to EARTH/SIGMA 2619 before and somewhat helps him piece together some of the gaps in his memory.
• Question A: What layers have you already discovered in your BW Framework?
More like seeing new ones or helping the framework pop out more in different ways..
• Question B: Are there any other layers that you could think of?
5. Make a list of the Major Story Lines.
• Question A: What main characters have story lines that affect everyone else?
• Question B: What are the most important story lines of this show?
-Bruce to appear as a fish out of water
-Bruce to have gaps in his memory
-One of the agents to appear to have ambitions that can put his partner in grave jeopardy.
-The Mysterious woman be almost impossible to catch
-The TECH to be deadly if left in the wrong hands
EPISODE SUMMARY
• Episode 1: Bruce arriving on Earth/Sigma 2619 as a fish out of water.
• Hook/Intrigue: Bruce is landing literally through a portal and is told he is under a deadline for which he doesn’t care. He is hunting after the scent of something like a hunter. Be ends up getting advice and mentoring from a blind old man who mistakes him for an immigrant when Bruce explains he is an alien. The old man encourages Bruce not to talk about where he is from until he gets his proper papers.
• Main Character journey: From fish out of water to needing help.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: where is the person really behind the bank robberies?
• Action/Reaction: Bruce chases a lead but that bumps him into a girl who he ends up giving advice too.
• Cliffhanger: Bruce realizes while looking for the TECH he is not alone as he notices the back of the neck of the girl he was giving advice to at a local cafe.
• Episode 2: The Mysterious woman has left a trail of victims that have no memory.
• Hook/Intrigue: Bruce slips into the police headquarters disguised as an officer to get the addresses of all the people who robbed the bank.
• Main Character journey: Although he is new on Earth/Sigmas 2619 he must learn customs just like any immigrant.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: Trying to fit in he asks the old man for some advice.
• Action/Reaction: Bruce takes a college course to learn how to socialize.
• Cliffhanger: with no strong clues to go on Bruce takes a seat next in his new class. A girl turns around and introduces herself. And says, didn’t we meet at the bar the other night where you drank gingerale? Bruce says, that was some good Gingerale.
• Episode 3: The Agents on the scene on focused no the person and not the TECH being used.
• Hook/Intrigue:Bruce is checking out one of the victims of the TECH that was “mind swiped” to rob a bank but wakes up when arrested and has no knowledge of who or how anything happened.
• Main Character journey: Bruce learning how special agents operate. He goes undercover as different things to see how the agents work.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: Keeping himself from getting detected.
• Action/Reaction: Bruce trying to see how to infiltrate different agencies.
• Cliffhanger: Finding out one of the Agents is so ambitious that risking a life, including his partner would be part of the “sacrifice” to get ahead.
• Episode 4: Bruce meets the Agents but poses as a no-risk and as an insurance agent.
• Hook/Intrigue: Bruce going undercover as an insurance adjuster while juggling school homework.
• Main Character journey: Doing everything takes it’s toll as Bruce learns how to relax and gets a hit of marijuana.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: Handling marijuana for the first time.
• Action/Reaction: Posing as an insurance adjuster and asking to work together.
• Cliffhanger: One of the agents knows Bruce is lying and wants to get to the truth by any means necessary.
• Episode 5: Agents propose to work with Bruce and help his insurance report.
• Hook/Intrigue: After uncovering Bruce’s agent truth, bring home the reason many people lost their memory or never see a promotion the agents buy his story.
• Main Character journey: Bruce learning how to wheel and deal while studying with the first subject in a community college class.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: Handing in school assignments while saving the world.
• Action/Reaction: Bruce finds a truth that makes everyone happy to work with him.
• Cliffhanger: Agent proposes kidnapping one of the suspects and giving them drugs to find out what they really know.
• Episode 6: Bruce gets close to seeing the Mysterious woman but runs into Snowy, the first
victim.
• Hook/Intrigue: Finally a lead as the Mysterious woman finds Bruce as an insurance work believable.
• Main Character journey: Trust issues of someone who could potentially be a killer.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: Bruce doesn’t know if the Mysterious woman is to be trusted or if she is just a pawn.
• Action/Reaction: Bruce learning to trust and not trust others.
• Cliffhanger: Mystery woman hints that Bruce and the Mystery woman may know each other over coffees as Snowy, his classmate passes them in a cafe, a meeting that the Mystery woman set up to test Bruce’s reaction and see how he feels about someone.
• Episode 7 One of the Agents Bruce over-hears is willing to risk his partner’s life and Bruce to
catch the Mysterious woman.
• Hook/Intrigue: Snowy in the meeting of the mysterious woman thinks she may know her but not sure confirming Bruce’s suspicion that she maybe behind the TECH.
• Main Character journey: going from passive to proactive and dealing with memory flashbacks he can’t understand.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: alerting the agents to the whereabouts of the Mystery Woman
• Action/Reaction: alerting the agents about the Mystery Woman.
• Cliffhanger: The Mystery woman’s sudden search of her studio looks like there is a link with Bruce from letters to email exchanges (that she planted for the agents).
• Episode 8 Bruce memory starts coming back as he sees footage of the first crime cause he
gets a glimpse of the Mystery woman and may have figured out how to catch her.
• Hook/Intrigue: Bruce’s memory is coming back in bits and pieces.
• Main Character journey: Dealing with people from agents to the mystery woman to homework assignments to keep his identity secret as a regular person.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: keeping others believing he is human but struggling.
• Action/Reaction: dealing with his memory while trying to uncover the truth.
• Cliffhanger: A strong memory comes back that leads him to a locker and a cafe that may unlock who the Mysterious woman says he is.
• Episode 9 Mysterious woman leaves a message for Bruce telling him he has been here to
Earth/SIGMA 2619 before.
• Hook/Intrigue: the Mysterious woman talks to Bruce while his study partner goes to the bathroom that he must listen to.
• Main Character journey: working with the agents and stopping evidence from pointing to him.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: keeping ahead of the Mysterious woman and not getting found out by the agents.
• Action/Reaction: staying ahead of the Mysterious woman to not get arrested.
• Cliffhanger: Getting arrested on suspicion of treason.
• Episode 10 The Mysterious woman finds Bruce trapped but instead of letting him get caught by the agents by chance, she helps him escapee.
• Hook/Intrigue: Last the agents arrested Bruce while he was with his classmates.
• Main Character journey: knowing how crazy one of the agents and not killing him.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: knowing earth humor when the agents take him outside put in a car and then start laughing.
• Action/Reaction: knowing how to react to getting publicly arrested for a joke but agents that do it for a joke but immediately release him.
• Cliffhanger: Bruce gets trapped with the agents for a night out. the Mysterious woman finds him on the way back from the bathroom. and pulls him aside and tells him her life is in danger by the people he is with right now.
Page 8 Five Seasons Descriptions (Lesson 3)
Season 1: FISH OUT OF WATER
A. High Concept or major hook of the season. An alien without a memory is sent to earth to find stolen TECH and return it.
B. Big Picture Arc/Journey: the alien learns that Humans come in all shapes and forms.
C. Main Conflict: Alien must consider who is his friend and make alliances or go it alone.
D. Mystery/Open Loops: Why did the Mysterious woman say he has been to Earth/SIGMA 2619 before? Would one of the 2 agents to catch the Mysterious woman turn on everyone for his promotion? Can the Mysterious woman really be a friend? Who is the female Agent with the hidden past? Is it right to help the victim if you didn’t know who she was at first?
E. Cliffhanger: Bruce gets saved by the MYSTERIOUS WOMAN.
Summary: SEASON 1 Bruce is an alien sent to earth called SIGMA 2619, based on star year Earth was discover and named after the Emperor at that time. A technology is lost and being<font face=”inherit”> used to control humans and is running rampant. And may </font>destroy this tiny planet. Bruce arrives after a signature technology that monitors the emissions that are emitted point him to a city in North America. As he monitors the situation he finds out there are 2 agents dispatched from a secretive agency to capture the woman responsible. They call her the Mysterious Woman. Bruce tries to navigate earth but gets helps from an elderly man who is blind thinks he is a immigrant that just doesn’t know US culture rather than him being an alien.
Season 2:LEARNING TO SWIM
A. High Concept or major hook of the season. The Alien Bruce quickly adapts to Earth or Sigma 2619 by talking daily with a blind man, who mistakes his for an immigrant instead of the Alien he is.
B. Big Picture Arc/Journey: Bruce is adapting to Earth, not just his environment but the people live here and learns how their rules work.
C. Main Conflict: Bruce playing the middle between the Mysterious woman and the Agents.
D. Mystery/Open Loops: Will Bruce be able to adapt to Earth? What memories are coming back for Bruce to know about the Mysterious woman?
E. Cliffhanger: the Agent who is willing to sell out everyone get his chance.
Summary: SEASON 2 Bruce is getting his earth knowledge by trial-and-error, who to trust: possibly the agents but it comes with a price: exposure of his TECH or who he maybe or at least whom he is working for. The earth advisor, aka the blind old man guides Bruce to take some extra courses at a community college a few nights a week. In the class he meets Snowy who he met in the first season. Going back to school, even for an advanced alien proves its difficulties as Bruce feels drained he is introduced to everything from energy bars, smart classmates, coffee pills (after coffee) and even marijuana ( which has a hilarious effect on Bruce). During the day time Bruce is dealing with the Mysterious woman who is only leaving slight clues about her moves or none at all. And the agents go from clueless to hostile toward anyone working with them and making them look like fools. Bruce at the end of the season finds the lead agent is almost willing to risk the lives of those around him and maybe even his partner to catch the Mysterious woman as the season ends.
Season 3: WHO ARE MY FRIENDS?
A. High Concept or major hook of the season. Bruce, an Alien is learning who to trust as he navigates Earth.
B. Big Picture Arc/Journey: In a twist, Bruce enrolls in a local college that is part time studies. Only some of his classmates may have been planted there to spy on him. Bruce is learning as Earth Humans do by trial and error.
C. Main Conflict: Working with the two agents he learns that 3s a crowd in a team of 2.
D. Mystery/Open Loops: What really happened to the 2nd agent and how did she get like this?
the old man he meets in the mornings has a strange past, will he open up? How will he connect with Snowy-help her or love her?
E. Cliffhanger: Snowy’s life is in danger and the alien may have to use his powers to save her. Will things ever be the same when you discover your friend has powers?
Summary: SEASON 3 Bruce opens the season with deciding not to help the agent catch the Mysterious woman at the risk of the female agent. The female agent instead of turning on her fellow agent secretly starts to like Bruce, even though she is not sure his actual identity. They strike up a conversation at a coffee shop and meet there almost every 2nd day as they start their days. It is lite conversation. She does notice Bruce is studying for a class and offers to help him indirectly. Meanwhile, Snowy and Bruce get closer until Snowy sees Bruce talking to the female agent and it look flirtatious to her. So Bruce is involved in what can be described as a love triangle, only Bruce never had one before. At the end of the season it seems the old man might not be so naive as he seems. And Bruce may have to show his TECH in trying to save Snowy who suddenly gets in some danger.
Season 4 WHO ARE MY ENEMIES?
A. High Concept or major hook of the season. Another collector is sent from the homeward.
B. Big Picture Arc/Journey: Going from seeker of the TECH to protector of human rights on SIGMA 2619.
C. Main Conflict: To keep on working with the Humans and not form any attachments that can put them in harm. The Mysterious woman steps up her attacks. Memories are pouring back in in fragments.
D. Mystery/Open Loops: Who is the new collector here to monitor the humans or Bruce? Will the female agent say how she feels about Bruce as he gets closer to Snowy?
E. Cliffhanger: the Mysterious Woman purposes to finish off the new collector or send him back for a price.
Summary: SEASON 4 Snowy is saved and Bruce is able to do it with the help of the Agent and both of them don’t realize it. But a big surprise happens and it is the form of a 2nd collector. This one is like Bruce but he has all his memory in-tact. He also seems to be more familiar with Sigma 2619/Earth than Bruce was when he arrives. And at the same time the other agent who seems very uncooperative with getting outside help. Namely Bruce’s help directly or indirectly turns out to be a bit of difficult person so much Bruce might have to use his TECH to put him down. And to end the season with the Mysterious woman who comes to Bruce and proposes to finish off the collector and or the agent and show Bruce who he really is as he gets more and more of pieces of his memory.
Season 5 TIME TO FIGHT BACK
A. High Concept or major hook of the season. Bruce is sure those who sent him are the ones who robbed him of his memory to protect the TECH.
B. Big Picture Arc/Journey: Bruce instead of being a collect starts to fight back against the home world.
C. Main Conflict: Against the Mysterious Woman who now has enemies it is revealed.
D. Mystery/Open Loops: Can Bruce flush out the Mysterious Woman with her enemies in pursuit? Who are the Mysterious Woman’s enemies? Who was the 2nd collector before coming to Sigma 2619? Can people be redeemed (one of the agents or the 2nd collector or the Mysterious woman)?
E. Cliffhanger: All secrets are revealed, what Bruce feels for Snowy. Who the Mysterious woman really is and how she knows Bruce! And with more memories does Bruce want to really find the TECH? And will he allow the TECH to be copied? Can it be copied?
Summary: SEASON 5 Bruce doesn’t take the offer of the Mysterious wholly to finish off the 2nd collector cause that will bring the Empire’s people in full force upon Sigma 2619. Bruce is seeing almost no choice but to work with the Mysterious woman as she offers to tell Bruce who he really was before he lost his memory and asked for this assignment to show the Empire he is worthy. Meanwhile, the agents might have made a big breakthrough just as the female agent is on the verge of quitting the “agency” and telling Bruce how she really feels Snowy surprises Bruce at the coffee shop and is already sitting with Bruce for a last-minute cram session before his test. Bruce finds out who the old man is who has been helping him. He is an ex agent who was sent over 50 years ago but decided to retire on Earth then go back and even raised a family. The final blow to this final season is when the Mysterious woman says it is a waste for Bruce to get his memory back fully because the people that sent him are really his enemy and he in fact is responsible for the TECH be stolen and sent to earth to keep it ‘out of the hands’ of bad people.
ASSIGNMENT 1:
Summary
An alien is sent to earth and doesn’t know who to trust as he hunts for THE TECH, a technology that needs to be retrieved from dangerous people who may be using it to control the minds of humans, giving them skills to rob banks and wiping their minds when they are caught. A mysterious woman is accidentally discovered near and around each one of these incidents by a pair agents who are hot on her trail only they don’t know her next move.
As Bruce takes on SIGMA 2619’s custom he is tracing the residue left after THE TECH is used that leads him to a bar where he tries to take on local SIGMA 2619 habits, but this night is unlike any other with Bruce as he faces a college frosh week challenge and thinks he can outdrink humans in a human body without eating for two days that quickly falls flat and mixing in a state-allowed marijuana blunt called the “super” Susan result in a wacky trip into Bruce subconscious where the woman he is hunting stands next to him but being under the influence he thinks it is a dream never drank or smoked before that he is really the person who had THE TECH to start with and he sent this mysterious woman to get it.
Hearing a pounding he wakes up in a girl’s frat dorm not knowing what was real and what was not real. And outside the agents he was following that gave him the info about the Mysterious woman are now knocking outside the frat dorm he has woken up in. This is the end of the first season/pilot.
2. Investigate by picking situations and characters and asking:
Tool 1: Dig: What’s beneath that?
-How does Bruce feel day to day? Is he optimistic or just plain hate Sigma 2619?
-Does he feel he is closer to solving who the Mystery Woman is?
Tool 2: Extrapolate: If Bruce gets involved with Snowy, then it changes a lot of how he will go after THE TECH.
-If Bruce listens to advice and takes courses at a community college then he might value Earth people of STIGMA 2619.
-If Bruce gets involved with the female agent, then it will change how she does her investigation.
-If Bruce gets involved with the female agents, then he might like to stay on Stigma 2619.
Tool 3: Wonder:
-What if the Mysterious woman is telling the truth to Bruce?
-What if Bruce’s bosses send someone unexpectedly to work with him or in competition with him?
-What if Bruce’s bosses send someone to kill him/Snowy/one of the Agent/Mystery Woman?
Tool 4: Backtrack:
-How could Bruce have been to Earth already and hid THE TECH have happened?
-What happens if Bruce already had set up enough information to give to the agents indicating THE TECH needs to be protected?
Tool 5: Forecast: How could this get even worse?
Bruce will reconcile that the agency he is working for is pure evil to erase his memory.
Bruce will have to play the game until he is in a position of leverage/ sabotage.
-The agents see him as a threat/ catch him sabotaging their work?
-Snowy finds out who he is?
-The Agents find out who he is?
-The Mystery woman is lying and she is very dangerous?
-The Mystery woman is telling the truth and her and Bruce do know each other?
3. Evaluate the possibilities and decide what you are going to use in the different parts of your TV Pitch Bible. Divide the answers into three categories:
Use in TV Pitch Bible-keep handy
Use in Episodes. Definitely use and may it out with time lines in shows.
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Jack’s TV Pitch Bible Investigation
What I learned from this assignment is that I have to keep asking what if questions, then find answers to the questions.
Tool 1: Dig: What’s beneath that?
– Intro of Hitler’s genes to be sold in U.S. – What’s behind this?
Santiago want’s power – he wants to clone himself after he has perfected it
– Intro Victoria and and Kayla, their love interest – what’s behind this?
Kayla is in awe of the royal family and wants to get closer, even though she keeps saying it’s the environment a child grows up in, not their genes, that determines their true being
– Intro Proffessor Matthews, and him being a Druid – what’s behind this?
He’s been excommunicated from his Druid community in England and will use Victoria’s genes and the DNA from Bran The Blessed to return triumphantly
– Intro Victoria’s hassle with Safety over Profit when market is going well – What’s behind this?
A financial crash occurs and Victoria’s investment in American farms with good water pays off – this leads to her involvement with Jimmy Gregory and the white supremists
Tool 2: Extrapolate: If Santiago’s cloned humans succeed, then he can clone himself, with improvements.
If Kayla switches her eggs for Victoria’s, then Kayla’s child will be raised as a royal
Tool 3: Wonder: What if Professor Matthews was kicked out of his English Druid community and stole the skull of Bran The Blessed and replaced it with someone else’s?
Tool 4: Backtrack: How could Hitler’s genes have made it to Buenos Aires?
Tool 5: Forecast: How could this get even worse?
1. A financial crash takes out Victoria’s funds
2. Victoria has Santiago clone a race horse so she can get back into good graces with the royal family but, after one great win, it dies
3. Kayla thinks she has beaten the curse but she loses her Everglades case
4. Sir George
3. Evaluate the possibilities and decide what you are going to use in the different parts of your TV Pitch Bible. Divide the answers into three categories:
Use in TV Pitch Bible.
Use in Episodes.
Don’t use.
4. For any parts where there is a substantial improvement, rewrite those parts of the TV Pitch Bible. Then, tell us what parts you changed and give a quick description of what you did.
I changed Victoria and Professor Matthews living in New York instead of England. The professor was excommunicated from his Druid faith and wants to use Victoria’s genes and the DNA from Bran The Blessed’s skull, which he stole from England, to return and claim his rightful place with the Druids. – This is similar to tales of past kings banished only to return and win their kingdom back -The mystery is, why was Professor Matthews banished?
Since Victoria now live in NYC instead of London, Kayla visits, giving her a chance to find out more about her father, whom she never sees. The mystery is, why doesn’t her father ever see her? Since her father is a banker, there is now the possibility of Victoria and Kayla’s father having some kind of financial involvement, with conflict, deceit, treachery and theft all possibilities.
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I learned that asking a few questions can take me place I never considered before.
Binge Worthy – Mod 2, Lesson 7 Investigate my show
Tool 1: Dig: What’s beneath Paige’s behavior?
I think there’s a 20-year-old man (she’s 16-years-old) encouraging her to do interesting things. Like stayinf away from home for two days without telling her parents where she is; trying Ecstasy; confront her mother regarding her attraction to Savage; seduce Savage in front of her mother; kill a cat; kill a person.
Tool 2: Extrapolate: If Pagie does any of these “suggestions”, then how does she feel about herself, or about him?
Tool 3: Wonder: What if she does the less radical does it make her more interesting?
Tool 4: Backtrack: How could her meeting of him have happened?
They met when she was running and twisted her ankle. He stopped to help her. They had an immediate attraction.
Tool 5: Forecast: How could this get even worse? This could lead to Marta’s being arrested.
3. Evaluate the possibilities and decide what you are going to use in the different parts of your TV Pitch Bible. Divide the answers into three categories:
Use in TV Pitch Bible.
Use in Episodes.
Don’t use. Maybe too this makes Paige too dark which takes the story not a dark place.
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Jean’s TV Pitch Bible Investigation
What I learned doing this assignment is that there is always more to discover. I wasn’t sure what it would be or where the ideas would come from. But I let it stew around when I got stuck and came up with some cool ideas I can now use.
2. Investigate by picking situations and characters and asking:
Tool 1: Dig: What’s beneath that?
Memory block: Used on Faolan to forget that he’s responsible for his clan’s death. He asked for it though Lazarus protested. Since then, Faolan lives without a past and thus no attachments.
Her photographic memory spots the clues in the maps that her mission is not of this time but of London of 1825.
The Vault facilities has room for hundred more agents and is now a ghost town.
Tool 2: Extrapolate: If __________, then ____________.
Sharra’s co-worker at the firm is actually J.D. Dash on a recon mission to stop her from first contact with Vault agency but actually causes it. Jeremy is a guy he met at a bar.
Tool 3: Wonder: What if ______________?
The assimilation chamber is tampered with, reprogrammed by J.D. Dash. Set to kill Sharra. The second dose of agrylium sets off the alarm, warning others of the problem and saving Sharra.
What if Sharra does create a time ripple and an agent gets killed during it?
What if to stop the paradox, the Vault has to die but before they can do that, they have to fix whatever tragedy that had originally made them join the Vault, to begin with.
What if when they do the big reset, Grayson, who is the cause of Sharra’s downward spiral gets committed to a mental institute because he has visions about the Vault and all that has happened.
What if the entity has seen the whole story play out and plays it back to Sharra when she enters a pylon.
What if the entity calls Grayson into the Vault, though he thinks it’s by chance, to spur on its cause.
Tool 4: Backtrack: How could ______________ have happened?
How did Grayson get assimilated without anyone at the agency knowing? Just like with Sharra, the entity is behind it. It wants both there for its own purpose.
How was the Vault created? Lazarus found a piece of agrylium buried on his property(put there by himself in the future) and it connected him to the entity. He is shown his timeline where he will be killed by his uncle or another timeline where he becomes the Head Director of Vault Agency and all that entails. He chose to live.
How can Lazarus’ coverup be revealed? Agents start going crazy(brain shift) and Lazarus has to come clean to explain the phenomenon.
Tool 5: Forecast: How could this get even worse?
Every time Sharra saves someone, someone else gets hurt or killed.
Every time Sharra tries to fix her mistake, she makes it worse.
Sharra has to fight against the brain shift craziness and make the ultimate sacrifice, her life, to end the entity.
3. Evaluate the possibilities and decide what you are going to use in the different parts of your TV Pitch Bible. Divide the answers into three categories:
Use in TV Pitch Bible.
Her photographic memory spots the clues in the maps that her mission is not of this time but of London of 1825.
Sharra has to fight against the brain shift craziness and make the ultimate sacrifice, her life, to end the entity.
What if to stop the paradox, the Vault has to die but before they can do that, they have to fix whatever tragedy that had originally made them join the Vault, to begin with.
Use in Episodes.
Sharra’s co-worker at the firm is actually J.D. Dash on a recon mission to stop her from first contact with Vault agency but actually causes it. Jeremy is a guy he met at a bar.
Memory block: Used on Faolan to forget that he’s responsible for his clan’s death. He asked for it though Lazarus protested. Since then, Faolan lives without a past and thus no attachments.
The assimilation chamber is tampered with, reprogrammed by J.D. Dash. Set to kill Sharra. The second dose of agrylium sets off the alarm, warning others of the problem and saving Sharra.
What if when they do the big reset, Grayson, who is the cause of Sharra’s downward spiral gets committed to a mental institute because he has visions about the Vault and all that has happened.
What if the entity has seen the whole story play out and plays it back to Sharra when she enters a pylon.
What if the entity calls Grayson into the Vault, though he thinks it’s by chance, to spur on its cause.
How did Grayson get assimilated without anyone at the agency knowing? Just like with Sharra, the entity is behind it. It wants both there for its own purpose.
How was the Vault created? Lazarus found a piece of agrylium buried on his property(put there by himself in the future) and it connected him to the entity. He is shown his timeline where he will be killed by his uncle or another timeline where he becomes the Head Director of Vault Agency and all that entails. He chose to live.
How can Lazarus’ coverup be revealed? Agents start going crazy(brain shift) and Lazarus has to come clean to explain the phenomenon.
What if the entity calls Grayson into the Vault, though he thinks it’s by chance, to spur on its cause.
4. For any parts where there is a substantial improvement, rewrite those parts of the TV Pitch Bible. Then, tell us what parts you changed and give a quick description of what you did.
Episode 2:
Sharra gets her first mission assignment as a courier in London. Her photographic memory spots the discrepancies in the map and she figures it out. Not to London of now, but to 1825. She’s going to ‘fix’ time! Vault agents are time travelers!
Episode 6:
Tanner takes Sharra to his own timeline to his mother and sister’s
gravestones, to what he can’t change. Sharra lies about tampering with her past
family.Episode 8:
Together, they fix the ripple, freeing the stuck agents from harrowing situations, but Grayson witnesses them shifting out and he realizes who she is – a future Sharra. When Sharra is back at the Vault, she learns that agents had died and she caused it.
Season 4: I’ve added a few ideas together at the end:
Grayson forces Sharra into the pylons in a fit of madness. She takes him with her but it kills him. But not Sharra. Inside the pylon, she discovers the true nature of the lifeforce and that it needs to ‘feed’ off electromagnet energy to survive. It chose her from all of time to help it.
In season 5:
Mess with time too long and it will eventually mess with you. Agents start going crazy(brain shift) and Sharra makes the connection between the entity and the agrylium in their heads. Lazarus has to come clean to explain the phenomenon.
Lazarus discovers that Sharra has unwittily set off a paradox that will
wipe them all out.Sharra has to fight against the brain shift craziness and make the ultimate sacrifice, her life, to end the entity and finishing the reset.
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Janeen’s TV Pitch Bible Investigation
What I learned doing this assignment is that I was telling stories before even though they were based on the “intriguing” bits from the BW Framework. Ignoring the stories (cause, effect, circumstances) and just focusing on the actions shortened things considerably. The questions helped to make things a bit more exciting.
4. I changed the later seasons to include more intrigue — usually romantic/interpersonal drama rather than criminal activity. Betrayals don’t have to be illegal.
I also shortened a LOT based on NOT TELLING STORIES. I had given context to nearly all of my story threads since they are heavily interwoven. I can’t tell 1 character’s story and have interesting episodes as different characters figure heavily in storylines at different times. Eliminating context and cause allowed me to provide the intriguing bits with more brevity.
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Module 2, lesson 7. Investigating my bible.
I spent the weekend brainstorming for hours at a time and now feel so excited by the new ideas I have come up with to improve the story.
I had an unknown murder victim from the start. I have her a name, what she wanted and then realised the opening and closing of my pilot episode would be great with her in it. Another smaller character that didn’t have much personality (daughter of main character), suddenly became someone that could have a very interesting character arc. She could rise up and take over an organisation from her Grandfather. I picked apart all of my characters and found more ways to make them empathetic (even the antagonists) and ways to create more conflict in each of their relationships. ie. Zoe had a sister. I started to ask what if the sister was trying to help rebuild Zoe’s relationship with her mother but kept getting it wrong. What if Zoe got the strength to visit her mother after years of not seeing her and then she is rejected all over again. what if I build up to them meeting each other, and the mother cancels at the last minute. what could be a really horrible, nasty way of a mother rejecting her daughter? what if Zoe’s husband was really wonderful when she first met him? what if Zoe was successful to start off with, then lost her confidence? What if our antagonist, Leo, loved children? what if he was not the one to order the hit on Zoe’s family but was just part of the organisation and owed them? I delved more into Alex’s character and asked what moral dilemmas could I give him? he was running for senator and his party controlled. him and told him to get rid of his girlfriend – she wasn’t ‘wife’ material. he dumped her, he felt bad. He decided to secretly see her again. and then I thought about a hook – what if the girlfriend was working for the opposite party and was a ‘spy’?
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Rob’s TV Pitch Bible Investigation
Ok, so I’ve been nutting out some more of the elements of my story and have completely changed a whole lot of stuff. Primarily, I decided I had a whole lot of story in the later seasons that I decided to bring back into Season 1, so I’ve brainstormed some different directions for the later seasons to go in. I’ve come up with a bunch of increasing threats and larger settings in which to place them, and condensed the stuff I originally had intended to be Seasons 2 – 5.
I’ve also merged a bunch of storylines into the main thread in the hope that it will have a stronger through line.
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