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[Renee Brown]

Renee Brown completed P/S grid #2.

What I learned in this assignment is to (try to) place myself in the mindset of someone who knows nothing about my story. It becomes easier to see the problems when I am not buried in the story.

I tweaked some exposition into reveals. Biggest thing I saw were weak descriptions and weak character intros. But I see that is in lesson 12&13 coming up, so I won’t get ahead here.

[Emmanuel Sullivan]

Emmanuel Sullivan Completed P/S Grid #2

What I learned doing this assignment is the problem/solution grid for characters and scenes is very helpful with finding issues and helpful solutions. What I find is characters and scenes can get complicated with all the details and you tend to get stuck. The grid is the answer to quickly resolving issues.

[Sherri Coffee]

Sherri D. Coffee Module 4 Lesson 7 Completed P/S Grid #2

What I learned doing this assignment is to brainstorm more ways to create distress so that the character is able to solicit empathy. I reworked the teaser to create a situation that includes undeserved misfortune, the witness to the pain of another, a major loss and an undeserved misfortune.

[Barbara Gilmore]

I’m still working on Draft 2 but I already used Grids 1 and Grid 2 to help identify and solve some problems I see with Draft 1. I’m wondering if I’ll not see any problems :))…

I also have my protagonist stay at a haunted house and I’m wondering if that adds to the story or detracts from it…I want it to be an added layer and it’s part of two characters it’s meant to add intrigue and suspense…but does it work or is it out of place…also there are undertones of animals being impacted by humans and I might introduce a wildfire as a ticking clock but also to show that reality for people living in remote areas those threats they face…

Weak Scenes:

Characters need more Depth and we need to care about and elicit audience engagement:

I introduced another wound for Jess not only is she sent to another jurisdiction but she’s also demoted. A male colleague (and this will be revealed later) was not demoted when doing the same thing as her.

Exposition instead of reveals and scenes that are not intriguing:

Several of my scenes have too much exposition and lack intrigue.

Weak Antagonist:

My antagonist appears in just two scenes in the Pilot. The identity of the perpetrators are bound up in the murder and disappearance mysteries. However, like my protagonist, Jess, my antagonist, Dave, experienced his own undeserved misfortune. Although he’s a bad guy I don’t want him to be one dimensional.

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[Daniel Melin]

Daniel Melin completed P/S grid #2.

What I learned doing this lesson is the value of keeping a positive mindset. I ended up falling WAY behind on my work on my pilot for various reasons, but chief among them that I simply got scared and starting psyching myself out and making excuses. I’ve gotten back at it, however, and things are looking up. I’ve also been having a lot of breakthroughs on big picture arcs for the whole season, and am looking forward, not only to finishing the pilot, but getting back to working on my Framework and Pitch Bible.