WIM+AI – WIM Module 6: Lesson 5: Exchange Feedback on Draft 2

[Michael Collado]

Mike’s Script Exchange 1

My Vision is to write an original screenplay, make a couple of calls to pitch it, to start a bidding war.

I have finished the second draft of the script Smart Ball. The concept is that a suspended female detective takes on coaching a baseball team with all brainiacs; she uses their language, math, science, physics, and a few tricks from college to turn them into a team of Baseball Geniuses. Then she uncovered a plot to use the little leaguers as lab rats to test a new nanobot information brain enhancement to elevate their baseball playing ability to a hall-of-fame level.
I would love to get some feedback on the script and will reciprocate by doing the same. If you would like to give me feedback but your script is not ready, I can wait until it is ready and then provide you with feedback at that time. Please email me if you are interested: ColladoM22@gmail.com.

Thank you.

• This reply was modified 9 months ago by  Michael Collado.

[Margaret]

Would you like to exchange? silebi@hotmail.com Margaret- I’ll send you an email.

[Margaret]

I received feedback from another screenwriter. Thank you.

[Pat Fitzgerald]

Pat's Script Exchange 1

The second draft of my dark comedy, Retirement Pillage is finished and I would like to exchange scripts for feedback.
The concept is: When a serial killer’s intended victims start dying before she can do the deed, she decides to retire, never thinking karma’s gonna get her for past actions.

I am willing to give feedback on any genre aside from sci-fi. I am just not educated enough in the sci-fi realm to do a script justice.

If you are interested in exchanging, please contact me at peggi_oh@yahoo.com. TIA, Pat

• This reply was modified 8 months, 3 weeks ago by  Pat Fitzgerald.

[Sunil Pappu]

Sunil Pappu’s Script Exchange 1

I’m a bit behind with this and I am not sure we are still doing the exchange but I still wanted to post my assignment. I have just completed my second draft and there are no major problems in the script.

Title: 1971 Silent War
Genre: War Thriller
Concept: A female radio operator trained as a British spy is enlisted to intercept a top-secret cable between the US and Pakistan critical for India to join the Bangladesh liberation forces in the 1971 Indo-Pak war.
Email address: sunilrpappu@orchidroomproductions.com

• This reply was modified 8 months, 2 weeks ago by  Sunil Pappu.

[Kathryn Gould]

If anyone is still looking for an exchange at this point in the lessons, I’m ready for that now.

Kathryn

[John Trimbach]

Hi Kathryn,
I’m also catching up but ready for an exchange. Feel free to email yours and I will reply.

thanks,
John

johntrimbach@gmail.com

[Kathryn Gould]

oh my gosh just saw this sorry, do you still want to trade?

[Kathryn Gould]

replied in the wrong place sorry

• This reply was modified 6 months, 1 week ago by  Kathryn Gould.