Andrea Verde
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Andrea Verde: “I agree to the terms of this release form.”
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Green Book:
These two characters come from different worlds. However, they both have distinct personalities and this makes the movie so fun to watch. But they respect each other and this comes through loud and clear.
They have to get over the walls they both have by peeling back the tension. Each is their own person and this is where the respect grows. Eventually they come to an agreement and can work together. And Tony will be able to protect Shirley like no one else can since he knows the south and all that lurks.
They are mismatched but through Tony’s strength and what others said about him he will prove to be Shirleys best bet for protection.
The drama is built around Shirley needing to be protected.
Shirley traits: Sophisticated, cultured, gifted musician, indulged. Wound: since he needs protection he’s been physically hurt in the past. Secret: not sure what his secret is but I’m sure its a good one. He’s covering it up with his music.
Tony’s traits: savvy, lethal, straight forward/practical Wound: not sure but since he’s a tough guy he was probably someone who was threatened or beaten up in his past. Secret: he has a secret, thats why he’s willing to take the job.
These are great characters since they are opposites. One plays off of the other and vice versa.
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Tombstone:
The tension putting these two together creates a wild fire. Both Doc and Ringo are drunk and each tries to out do the other.
Doc discovers that Ringo is just as mean and unruly as himself. When Doc looks into his eye he sees himself and the need to have power and be right and rule. He’s a threat to Doc.
These two characters stand out from the others since they are both so much the ame. Both command attention and authority. They show off in front of the others in the bar to look like they are superior than the others and tougher than all. This is demonstrated this by the way they slung their gun and bottle.
The drama in this scene is built around the bar which is rough and tough and very male. Even though there are women there they are submissive to the men and it’s definatly a mens place. Not to mention poker that’s being played.
They are right characters for this story since they both want power and control. And will fight the other to get it. This makes them worthy opponents.
Doc traits: Aggressive, Arrogant, Educated. Future: You know there will be some kind of fight for superiority. Wound: untrusting (not sure what happened since I don’t know story but he wants control which comes from a deep wound of unable to control his situation).
Ringo’s traits: Reactive, Intelligent, Controlling. Wound: Similar to Doc a deep hurt to want to control and conquer. maybe in his past someone tried to over come him and now he won’t let one person over come him. Future: He will be fighting for real with Doc it’s been set up. At this point they are equal so you don’t know who will win. This creates intrigue.
The breakthru is how the scene builds slowly. First a few gestures, looks, words, then small actions. This is great to see and it’s what I learned most. It builds and it gets quieter in the bar too until everyone is watching! Great writing!
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I’ll do my Seabisquit answer here since I don’t see a spot.
I believe Red and Sea Biscuit belong together because each one has a wild and untamed side. Both are out of control at the moment and even though it’s a horse and a person they definately belong together.
They have similar emotions of anger and rebellion in this scene and it helps Red see he’s meant to train Seabisquit.
The drama is built around the an out of control horse and the trainer trying to get the right person to ride him. It looks like an impossible fete. But actually it’s a future moment being tapped into that will be a once in a lifetime moment and a winning situation.
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Right character: Both Sea Biscuit and Red are perfect for each other with their temperaments. Their past hurts come out violently through their anger. The trainer also belongs with them since he believes in them both.
Red and Sea Biscuit’s Traits: Impulsive, violent, aggressive, driven to win
Future: Both Red and Seabisquit are winners even though they don’t know it yet. And they will help each other grow and be all that they are meant to be.
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Sleepless in Seattle:
I think these two characters belong together by the way they agree with radio Psychologist even though they do not know each other. They use the same words and both show high emotions that are similar. Similar in word tone and subtext exposing expressions that are empathetic and deep.
The drama is the young son feeling afraid since his dad is falling apart. Young children dont call radio shows so this is a very dramatic scene. You feel for the boy and when he connects and explains the situation this blossoms into a futuristic event by the audience wanting the dad and woman to meet up. She’s also in a dark time of her life driving in her car at nightime and vulnerable.
They both share a deep wound. He lost his amazing wife who loved Christmas. She loved Christmas and this explains the kind of woman he loved. One who loves family and tradition and love. This opens the woman’s eyes to what type of man he is since he had a wife like this. She’s also this type of woman like his wife. She’s in a blah relationship and also needs love. So they both need true love and belonging.
The writing perspective is very very clever. To put these two people in a situation that reveals them each so well and at the same moment without them knowing each other is brilliant.
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I learned a lot by breaking this wound scene down. First when it’s set up in the innocence and intimacy of the bedroom it allowed wounds to come out from such a deep place. I also liked how the emotions were all triggered in each of them exposing how deep the belief was. Such a good set up here and I can use this idea in my writing in different ways.
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The characters wounds exposed when Skylar asks Will to go to California with her. This is an opportunity for a better life and a new life from what Will was used to. But his fear for a better life is something he feels he’s not good enough for so he says no which pushes on her wound which is being unloved and abandoned. Their wounds are motivating all of this emotion in Will (anger, fear of rejection, doubt and doubt in himself) and in Skylar (fear she’ll never have the love she needs and won’t be loved) making her plead and beg and cry from such a deep hurt place. Their reactions are strong which shows the depth of the wound they both have. She is threatening his wounds of not being good enough and fear of rejection and he’s threatening her wounds by him not agreeing to go to CA with her and her fear of losing him and his love. The scene is built around the bedroom which is all about intimacy in the most personal way. The deepest ever feelings inside that they have never shared with anyone else before. It’s extremely personal. A very powerful scene here on wounds!
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I learned from these scenes in Lost is that you need to up the stakes to do a powerful secret reveal and upset many other characters to shift the story in a new direction to add meaning to your story. Adding a scene that demands the secret to be revealed is key. They did it by having a man die but there are other ways to do it. In my story I can use this idea by characters in my story who follow the prot to a place she didn’t know she was being followed to and ends up revealing a secret of who she really is.
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I really liked breaking this scene into it’s various parts. I learned a lot about being more sly in how you get a character to come out of their shell by using other characters to do that. By Bagger calling out a future win Junah will have– it sets up the stage for Junah’s journey of overcoming obstacles to heal his wounds from the war physically and mentally to get his swing back to go after his dreams and get his life back mentally too. Strong lesson for me for my writing.
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What I learned through this #2 in the Terminator scene is to think about the characters future and what that looks like for them. Adding this to their journey as done here really shows the obstacles and fears they must overcome to be conquerors in their story. Great lesson and this will help add hope and intrigue to my story I’m working on.
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What’s the set up? It’s the love triangle. The demand to know what Kate’s secret is by Marshall dying. How is Kates secret revealed? By a clever game of a truth or drink game. Kate is honest and reveals herself as a killer. The drama is when Kate’s boyfriend (i don’t know the whole story) but he’s drunk and abusive and she feels threatened and blows up the house, leaving him in there while he’s passed out. I can tell by the way he speaks to her that he’s not a good guy and scary. Just focusing on Kate’s character is she’s been deeply hurt, angry, and honest, while untrusting to a point.
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These two characters fit the concept and conflict since it’s about healing the wounds that war did to Junahs psyche. When Bagger shows up he’s got the answers to Junahs journey, he needs a mentor to show him how to go after his dreams again. By Bagger calling out Junah’s future win in the future this is a set up for what will be fulfilled in the story. The drama in this scene is built on the darkness of nighttime and all of the mysteries that will be revealed in the light that is to come for Junah. There are many unknowns as he takes his swings in the dark. The traits of the characters will move the story forward.
Bagger: Champion, mysterious, knowing-wise, mentor
Junah: angry, stubborn, hides true feelings, open to correction
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Sarah is a legend even though she doesn’t know it yet. She has a big call on her life. Shes also a survivor. She’s told the truth by Kyle who is a fighter too and determined to reach her to save her life. The two are very similar and their journey i(even though Kyle is from the future) to outsmart the enemy for the future they both want. Love and family, children and a great world to live in.
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(I think this is where I post?) Will hangs back to not expose his feelings until he needs to defend his friend who was trying to get a girl to like him. So this scene is about pulling out Will’s character and showing he’s a good guy to his friend even though he’s originally portrayed as a broken and ruined person. He’s a risk taker, confrontative, defender and highly intelligent.
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Hi I’m Andrea Verde, I’ve written 5 screenplays and am still learning so much. Taking this character class will help me gain more insight so I can make my characters and their relationships stronger. Something unusual about me is I love bubble gum like a kid would. It’s silly but its all I can think of right now. I’ve learned so much by taking Hal and Cheryls classes. Thanks and I look forward to meeting others in screenwritingu.
Andrea
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I agree to the terms of the class. Andrea
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Andrea’s Villains plans. What i learned is that by planning out the steps the Villain will take it makes it so much clearer and brings clarity to my goals in achieving the outcome I want in the story.
The end goal: For my villain to make enough money to pay for his sick child.
How to accomplish his goal: By taking funds and setting up Barry the water purifier guy to take the fall. By taking focus off himself and blaming Barry he can accomplish his scam and keep it going. (at least for awhile)
How to cover up: By using distraction techniques. Blames being short staffed. Blames Covid. Blames Government for not paying enough for water safety. And blows whistle on innocent people.
Sequence: 1. Focus on the sick people. 2. Focus on Covid. 3. Focus on all of Barry’s mistakes and get him fired so another person can be hired and then that person will be blamed. 4. Sets up Barry to be a liar when on trail. 5. Uses blackmail. 6. And still thinking of more for ending.
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Andrea’s BI Stacking Suspense
What I learned is how important it is to use this model when planning out a thriller script.
The twists and turns of Basic Instinct drive the model home although it’s hard to watch.
I saw the MIS model in this movie and observing the mystery of each scene and the action of the villan’s intrigue and movement and action of suspense.
The high stakes on the bottom of the PDF helped to clarify any questions I may have missed and also made me see the bigger picture of each scene too.
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Lesson #3
What I learned is that by looking into the characters mystery, intrigue and suspense it sets them up to be more edgy characters and spins the whole story to never have a dull moment.
Hero: Water tester Barry
Villain: City manager Stephen Law
High stakes: People could die with out safe water.
Life and death: Water in city is toxic
Thrilling because: What’s causing the water to be toxic
Intriguing world: Chemical supply chain for water treatment
Barry’s mystery role: He has made mistakes in the past withhis water treatment and almost cost someone their life who got sick.
Barry’s intrigue: He knows someone is tampering with his chemicals. He taunts those in charge trying to find who’s doing this.
Barry’s suspense: Will he get hurt trying to find corrupt person or even killed by conductiong his own secret investigation.
Villain Stephens mystery role: He’s using money to get back at someone in government he hates.
Villan Stephens intrigue role: Water supplies shrink and families get less and less while Stephens pockets grow.
Villain Stephen’s suspense role: Will his greed and hate destroy his town and the people?
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What I learned is that by creating the big MIS I will have a clearer picture of who, what, when and where that is working and what’s not.
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Unwitting hero- Water tester, Barry Black
Dangerous Villan: City Manager, Stephen Law
High stakes: People could die in city without good water
Life and death: Water is toxic
Thrilling because: What’s causing the water to be toxic?
Big Mystery: The trusted city Manager is taking money from the city chemical department
Big Intrigue: Supplies are scarce and orders don’t show up like much needed chemicals for filtration.
Big Suspense: Water tester Barry Black is getting death threats from sick patients with all kinds of ailments. Thinking it’s his fault.
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NONSTOP Thriller Conventions
What I learned is to dissect the terms, mystery, intrigue and suspense to get full understanding of each so this will translate to story and make it richer.
The movie I watched was NONSTOP. What made it a thriller was being in constant concern and worry for main character and others on plane.
Big mystery was who was man behind the threats of main character and all of his texts.
Big intrigue was villan’s threats and his twisted non stop harassment.
Big suspense was plane being in flight while threats and people being killed. Worried it would all go down.
It was a thriller because of its nonstop action from scene to scene.
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Hello, I’m Andrea Verde
2. i’ve written 5 scripts and am working on 2 now at the same time. (one is for MSC 15 class)
3. One of the scripts I’m writing now is a thriller and I needed some insights into mapping it out.
4. Love country music, dance and pilates.
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<div>Andrea Verde </div>
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