[Harry Harry Rankin]

Hi, I’m Harry,

I’ve written half a dozen feature scripts, some shorts and a couple of pilots. One feature was optioned.

This class will give me a structure to address the many rewrites I need to do. I feel I butterfly around too much and I am appreciative of Hal and Cheryl’s approach to script structure. The script I’m going to work on will have a whole new facelift here as a way of learning how to address this issue. Hoping it will help greatly in my interactions with producers.

When you visit London please come and have a drink on deck with me. I live on a boat in Richmond-upon-Thames. Cheers.

[Harry Harry Rankin]

Harry Rankin
I agree to the terms of this release form.

As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.
This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

[Harry Harry Rankin]

Harry Rankin
I agree to the terms of this release form:
GROUP RELEASE FORM
As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.
This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

[Harry Harry Rankin]

Hi, I’m Harry Rankin
I’ve written about 8 scripts across several genres and had one optioned.
I hope to reinforce the impact of my scripts with this class.
Although I will not be actively contributing as I am ultra-busy at present, I will be paying attention so that I can apply the insights to my current script rewrite, and will go through the course at a later date in detail.
Unique? Well…. I live in a boat on the river Thames near Richmond (London).

[Harry Harry Rankin]

Harry Rankin
I agree to the terms of this release form:
GROUP RELEASE FORM
As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.
This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

[Harry Harry Rankin]

Hi all,
Harry here.
I’ve written six scripts to completion, with many embryos in the nest…. One script optioned.
I write a mixture of Film and TV and various genres.

Currently I am half way through the WIM+AI course and started on the new Bingeworthy TV course, so I will be taking it slow on this comedy one. Please bear with me… I will likely not actually start this one for a while. Hoping to get more insights into writing comedy for film. My career includes time working in comedy department at BBC TV so I have to break away from that ‘British style’ too!

However, I’m happy to critique if you need someone’s fresh eyes!

Unique…? Well, I live on a boat on the river Thames. Not really unique – I met Simon Beaufoy (IMDB) when his houseboat was being repaired next to mine…Just before Slumdog Millionaire was released. I took it as a good omen!

[Harry Harry Rankin]

Harry’s Next Act 1 Scenes

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is:
The journey continues. Definitely liberating – but on reflection my scene seem short and snappy. Must be my Advertising background… Any film over 60seconds is huge!

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[Harry Harry Rankin]

Harry’s Act 1 First Draft Part 1

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is:
This is fun!
My mind is free-flowing
I do not feel intimidated by the blank page!
I use my beat-sheet outline from Module 4 as a rough guide which helps a lot.

This was relatively quick. I still have a slight tendency to edit as I go, and have to stop myself so that there is a bigger change in draft 2.

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[Harry Harry Rankin]

Harry’s High Speed Writing Rules

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is:
These rules are truly liberating. Getting stuff down on paper (virtual, at least) is THE best way to avoid writer’s block. Fiddling around and changing things later will become a joy rather than a chore!

I sped through the first scene in my script and it came out pretty good…(to me, that is)

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[Harry Harry Rankin]

Harry’s First Scene

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is:
First off, it is great to start writing!
Secondly, having a skeleton to hang the story on helps enormously with structure.
Thirdly, I can sense that I will be revisiting my skeleton outline frequently to adjust things, add things, change things and keep on track!

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[Harry Harry Rankin]

Hi All…. I'm a bit late to the party!

Title: GENESIS
Written by: Harry Rankin
Email: rankin.harry@gmail.com
Genre: Comedy/Drama
Concept: Against a backdrop of worldwide civil unrest and climate danger, a couple consummate their love off planet at the International Launch Project. When disaster strikes, leaving them alone and isolated in space, they become the focus of the world’s attention as they deal with their biggest challenge yet: childbirth orbit.

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[Harry Harry Rankin]

Harry’s Fascinating Scene Outlines

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: Fleshing the skeleton…

ACT ONE
Scene 1
Slugline: INT. WATERFALL – AFTERNOON
Description: Introduce Suli and Jon in a hilariously awkward training scenario, where they're both struggling with zero-gravity manoeuvres, but sparks fly between them nonetheless.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Intrigue): Suli and Jon are introduced in a zero-gravity training exercise, fumbling and bumping into each other.
Middle: (Uncomfortable Moment): Suli and Jon compete against each other in the exercise, highlighting the physical challenge and gender dynamics.
Ending: (Bonding): Despite coming last in the exercise, Suli and Jon share a laugh and start forming a connection.

Scene 2
Slugline: INT. TV CONTROL – DAY
Description: Discover reality TV show to win competition.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Superior Position): The audience learns about the reality TV aspect of the competition before the characters do.
Middle: (Conflict): The team faces a challenge to secure funding for the space station, adding pressure to their mission.
Ending: (Uncertainty): The protagonists win the competition, but the threat of global unrest looms over the upcoming space launch.

Scene 3
Slugline: INT. BUS – DAY
Description: Winners travel to training facility.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Anticipation): Suli and Jon, along with other winners, are excited as they travel to the training facility.
Middle: (Suspense): The journey is filled with hints about the facility's high security and past financial mismanagement.
Ending: (Mystery): They arrive at the locked compound, raising questions about the facility’s true purpose and security measures.

Scene 4
Slugline: EXT. COMPOUND – DAY
Description: Intro to training.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (More Interesting Setting): The training compound is revealed to be high-tech and fully monitored, adding to the pressure.
Middle: (Conflict): Suli and Jon struggle with the intense training exercises and lack of privacy.
Ending: (Hope): Despite the difficulties, they begin to see the importance of their mission and hope for its success.

Scene 5
Slugline: INT. NEWSROOM – DAY
Description: Intern saves her job and gets commission to interview protagonist.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Intrigue): The intern fights to keep her job by pitching an exclusive interview with the astronauts.
Middle: (Conflict): She faces resistance and must prove the value of her idea to skeptical superiors.
Ending: (Success): She secures the commission, linking the newsroom to the space mission and setting up future interactions.

Scene 6
Slugline: INT. POOL – DAY
Description: Training – but someone dies.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Suspense): The team undergoes extreme training exercises in the pool.
Middle: (Shock): A tragic accident occurs, resulting in the death of a trainee, highlighting the mission’s dangers.
Ending: (Moral Issue): Politicians decide to televise the training, despite the tragedy, to maintain public interest and funding.

Scene 7
Slugline: INT. BAR – NIGHT
Description: Meet-up. Protagonists kiss. Instant news.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Romance): Suli and Jon share a moment of connection and kiss in a bar, breaking the professional barrier.
Middle: (Conflict): Their kiss is caught by a journalist, violating their NDA and celibate clause.
Ending: (Suspense): They worry about the repercussions of their actions on the mission.

Scene 8
Slugline: EXT. ROCKY TERRAIN – DAY
Description: Training.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Engagement): Suli and Jon grow closer as they tackle a challenging training exercise in the rocky terrain.
Middle: (Conflict): They face political scrutiny and the question of whether their relationship can survive the mission.
Ending: (Hope): They reaffirm their commitment to each other and the mission.

Scene 9
Slugline: INT. BRIEFING ROOM – DAY
Description: Intro to technical ‘Bubble’.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Intrigue): The team is introduced to the “Bubble,” a key technical component of their mission.
Middle: (Conflict): Understanding and mastering the complex technology proves challenging.
Ending: (Hope): They successfully integrate the technology into their training, feeling more prepared for the mission.

Scene 10
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Dad tells Jon his engagement is off.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Conflict): Jon faces personal conflict as his father tells him to break off his engagement.
Middle: (Internal Dilemma): Jon grapples with his duty to his family versus his love for Suli.
Ending: (Relief): Jon decides to stay committed to Suli, feeling a sense of relief and resolve.

Scene 11
Slugline: INT. CANTEEN – DAY
Description: Jon flirts to re-claim Suli.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Romance): Jon makes a playful and determined effort to win back Suli’s trust in the canteen.
Middle: (Conflict): Suli is hesitant, reflecting on their past and the challenges ahead.
Ending: (Hope): Suli begins to soften, showing signs of forgiveness and rekindled affection.

Scene 12
Slugline: INT. DORMITORY – NIGHT
Description: Suli worried. Journalist says get on with relationship.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Conflict): Suli is anxious about her relationship and the mission.
Middle: (Reassurance): The journalist encourages her to pursue her happiness, providing an outside perspective.
Ending: (Hope): Suli feels reassured and more confident about continuing her relationship with Jon.

Scene 13
Slugline: INT. LOW ORBIT FLIGHT – DAY
Description: Training flight to sex.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Intrigue): Suli and Jon are on a training flight, exploring zero-gravity.
Middle: (Conflict): They break the rules by disabling cameras to have an intimate moment in zero gravity.
Ending: (Hope): They successfully share a private, romantic moment, strengthening their bond despite the risks.

ACT TWO
Scene 14
Slugline: EXT. CANYON – DAY
Description: Warring tribes meet. Two different family backgrounds for barbecue in Bryce Canyon.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Cultural Clash): Suli and Jon’s families meet, showcasing their different backgrounds and creating tension.
Middle: (Conflict): Cultural differences lead to misunderstandings and heated discussions.
Ending: (Tentative Understanding): Despite the clashes, the families begin to find common ground, fostering hope for support.

Scene 15
Slugline: INT. PLANE – DAY
Description: Technical check on weightless plane. Technician finds condom.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Discovery): A technician finds a condom during a routine check, raising eyebrows.
Middle: (Moral Decision): The technician grapples with whether to report the find, considering the implications.
Ending: (Man to Man): He decides not to report it, choosing to handle it discreetly to avoid causing trouble for Suli and Jon.

Scene 16
Slugline: INT. MEDICAL FACILITY – DAY
Description: Final medical exam but leaves before result.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Suspense): Suli undergoes a final medical exam, leaving before the results are revealed.
Middle: (Conflict): The nurse discovers something unusual in the test results but chooses to keep it quiet.
Ending: (Sympathy): The nurse’s sympathetic demeanor hints at deeper concerns, adding tension to the upcoming mission.

Scene 17
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Nurse tells controller and politician, but they say go ahead, but keep quiet.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Disclosure): The nurse reluctantly informs the controller and a politician about the potential issue.
Middle: (Conflict): They decide to proceed with the mission and keep the information confidential, despite the risks.
Ending: (Conspiracy): The nurse feels guilty and conflicted, knowing she’s letting Suli down by not being fully transparent.

Scene 18
Slugline: EXT. BUBBLE – DAY
Description: Successful docking and entry.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Success): The mission reaches a critical milestone with a successful docking.
Middle: (Technical Challenge): The team works through minor technical issues, showcasing their skills and teamwork.
Ending: (Relief): They successfully enter the Bubble, feeling a sense of relief and accomplishment.

Scene 19
Slugline: INT. GALLEY – DAY
Description: Fun with gravity switch – food fight.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Tension Release): The team plays with the gravity switch, leading to a spontaneous food fight.
Middle: (Conflict): Managing zero-gravity food chaos proves challenging but fun, bonding the team.
Ending: (Bonding): The playful moment strengthens their camaraderie and lightens the mood.

Scene 20
Slugline: INT. GREENHOUSE POD – DAY
Description: Suli tends plants, gets morning sickness.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Routine): Suli tends to the plants in the greenhouse pod, establishing a sense of normalcy.
Middle: (Revelation): She experiences morning sickness, revealing her pregnancy symptoms.
Ending: (Conflict): She struggles to hide the symptoms from the rest of the team, adding to her personal challenges.

Scene 21
Slugline: INT. GALLEY – DAY
Description: Discuss food standards. Payload itinerary.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Planning): The team discusses food standards and the payload itinerary.
Middle: (Conflict): Managing limited resources and planning for long-term survival creates tension.
Ending: (Concern): They express concerns about having enough supplies, highlighting the mission’s logistical challenges.

Scene 22
Slugline: INT. NEWSROOM – DAY
Description: Global conflict/warming issue.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Informative): Newsroom coverage reveals the escalating global conflict and climate issues.
Middle: (Alarming): The severity of the situation becomes clear, increasing the stakes of the mission.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): The team and audience hope the mission can provide a distraction or solution but fear the impact of worsening global issues.

Scene 23
Slugline: INT. FLEUR’S OFFICE – DAY
Description: Machinations regarding profiteering from war.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Strategy): Harrison discusses plans to profit from the ongoing conflict.
Middle: (Ethical Dilemma): The conversation reveals the moral corruption and greed behind the plans.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s fear that profiteers will succeed, adding a layer of tension to the mission’s importance.

Scene 24
Slugline: INT. FLIGHTDECK – DAY
Description: Drone crashes killing all team except Jon & Suli.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Disaster): The drone crashes, causing immediate chaos and fear.
Middle**: (Survival): Jon and Suli scramble to ensure their survival amidst the wreckage.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): They manage to survive, but the fear of being isolated and the mission’s fragility looms over them.

ACT THREE
Scene 25
Slugline: INT. CONTROL ROOM – DAY
Description: Crash breaks news across the world.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Tragedy): News of the crash spreads, causing global shock and concern.
Middle: (Media Frenzy): The control room deals with a barrage of media inquiries and public scrutiny.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): The world hopes for a swift rescue but fears the worst for the astronauts.

Scene 26
Slugline: EXT. TRAILER PARK – DAY
Description: Kate interviews Zoe’s Mum. “I used to live just over there.”
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Personal Connection): Kate interviews Zoe’s Mum, revealing a personal link to the broader narrative.
Middle: (Emotional Revelation): The interview uncovers past hardships and emotional struggles.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s hope that the interview will shed light on the situation, adding depth to the story.

Scene 27
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Organize rescue mission.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Planning): The team in Dennis’s office organizes the logistics of the rescue mission.
Middle: (Conflict): Logistical and political hurdles threaten to delay the mission.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s hope that the rescue mission will succeed despite the challenges.

Scene 28
Slugline: INT. CONTROL ROOM – DAY
Description: Nurse tells Suli she is pregnant. Jon doesn’t hear, but the world does.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Revelation): The nurse reveals to Suli that she is pregnant.
Middle: (Conflict): The revelation is broadcast to the world, causing public and personal turmoil.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): Suli hopes to handle the pressure, while fearing the public reaction and privacy invasion.

Scene 29
Slugline: INT. SLEEP POD – NIGHT
Description: Suli tells Jon. Last to know – huff.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Communication Breakdown): Suli tells Jon about her pregnancy, feeling upset that he’s the last to know.
Middle: (Emotional Hurt): They discuss the impact of the news and their feelings of betrayal and concern.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): They begin to understand each other, hoping to reconcile and face the challenges together.

Scene 30
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Fleet grounded for safety checks.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Setback): The rescue fleet is grounded for safety checks, causing a major delay.
Middle: (Conflict): The team faces bureaucratic delays and logistical challenges.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s hope that the fleet will resume quickly, but fear of prolonged isolation.

Scene 31
Slugline: INT. MEDICAL FACILITY – DAY
Description: Cover-up of pregnancy exposed.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Secret Revealed): The cover-up of Suli’s pregnancy is exposed.
Middle: (Conflict): The ethical breach causes tension and trust issues among the team.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s hope for accountability, but fear of further consequences.

Scene 32
Slugline: EXT. TRAILER PARK – DAY
Description: Mum demonstration with Suli 8mm films.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Nostalgia): Zoe’s Mum demonstrates old 8mm films of Suli, creating a sense of nostalgia.
Middle: (Emotional Expression): The films evoke strong emotions and memories.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s hope that the demonstration will garner public support and understanding.

Scene 33
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Backup team prepared for rescue mission.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Preparation): The backup team is prepared for the rescue mission.
Middle: (Conflict): Coordination and logistical challenges arise.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s hope that the backup mission will succeed, but fear of unforeseen obstacles.

Scene 34
Slugline: EXT. SENATE BUILDING – DAY
Description: Blackmail attempt to sabotage mission.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Threat): A blackmail attempt is made to sabotage the rescue mission.
Middle: (Ethical Dilemma): The team faces an ethical dilemma and power struggle.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s hope that the blackmail will fail, but fear of its impact on the mission.

Scene 35
Slugline: INT. BUBBLE – DAY
Description: Journalist anchor as shuttle approaches. Wave at window.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Hope): The journalist anchors as the shuttle approaches, building anticipation.
Middle: (Conflict): The mission faces technical challenges, causing tension.
Ending: (Disappointment): Access is denied, leading to disappointment and isolation.

ACT FOUR
Scene 36
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Controller now blackmails politician with recording.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Leverage): The controller uses a recording to blackmail the politician.
Middle: (Ethical Compromise): The politician faces an ethical compromise and must decide how to proceed.
Ending: (Action): The blackmail leads to decisive action to fund a real rescue mission.

Scene 37
Slugline: INT. BUBBLE – DAY
Description: Suli and Jon play I-spy.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Boredom): Suli and Jon play I-spy to pass the time, showing their boredom.
Middle: (Bonding): The game turns into a bonding moment, deepening their relationship.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): They stay connected, hoping to maintain their relationship despite the challenges.

Scene 38
Slugline: INT. SLEEP POD – NIGHT
Description: Gravity hi-jinks in shower. Love. Journalist covers!
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Fun): Suli and Jon engage in gravity hi-jinks in the shower, showing their playful side.
Middle: (Intimacy): Their playful moment turns into an intimate one, highlighting their love.
Ending: (Privacy vs Public): The journalist covers their moment, creating tension between their need for privacy and public scrutiny.

Scene 39
Slugline: INT. NEWSROOM – DAY
Description: Global support.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Concern): The newsroom shows global concern for the astronauts’ situation.
Middle: (Solidarity): Differing opinions are expressed, but a sense of global unity emerges.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s hope that support remains strong, but fear of waning interest.

Scene 40
Slugline: INT. SLEEP POD – NIGHT
Description: Nesting. Curtains – nobody can see.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Preparation): Suli and Jon prepare their sleep pod, creating a safe space.
Middle: (Security): They hang curtains to ensure privacy, emphasizing their need for security.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): They feel safe, hoping this privacy lasts, but fearing further intrusion.

Scene 41
Slugline: INT. FLIGHTDECK – DAY
Description: Labor pains.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Calm): Suli experiences the first signs of labor, initially calm.
Middle: (Crisis): Labor pains escalate, turning the situation into a crisis.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s hope for a smooth delivery, but fear of complications.

Scene 42
Slugline: INT. MEDICAL FACILITY – DAY
Description: Nurse and journalist talk.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Information): The nurse and journalist share critical information about the situation.
Middle: (Trust Issues): They grapple with trust issues, deciding how to handle the news.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): They develop a strategy, hoping it works, but fearing it might fail.

Scene 43
Slugline: INT. GALLEY – DAY
Description: Jon boils water.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Preparation): Jon prepares for the birth by boiling water.
Middle: (Resource Management): He manages the limited resources, showing his involvement.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): He feels ready, hoping to be useful, but fearing potential issues.

Scene 44
Slugline: INT. NEWSROOM – DAY
Description: World experts offer conflicting advice.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Chaos): The newsroom is filled with conflicting advice from world experts.
Middle: (Cooperation): They work to find a unified approach, despite differing opinions.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s hope for the right decisions, but fear of ongoing chaos.

Scene 45
Slugline: INT. SLEEP POD – NIGHT
Description: Swearing practice in different languages. Journalist covers.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Tension): Suli and Jon practice swearing in different languages to relieve tension.
Middle: (Humor): The exercise turns humorous, lightening the mood.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): They feel more relaxed, hoping humor eases the stress, but fearing it’s not enough.

Scene 46
Slugline: EXT. LAUNCH PAD – DAY
Description: Final rescue launch.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Launch): The final rescue launch takes off, building anticipation.
Middle: (Technical Issues): The mission faces technical issues, causing concern.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): There’s hope the rescue will succeed, but fear of failure.

Scene 47
Slugline: INT. BUBBLE HOSPITAL BAY – DAY
Description: They don’t like the look of the birthing bed/stirrups etc. Loads too much advice from ‘experts’ on Earth. Try turning off gravity to help. It doesn’t.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Discomfort): Suli and Jon are uncomfortable with the birthing bed and stirrups.
Middle: (Desperation): They try turning off gravity to help, following too much advice from experts.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): The attempt fails, increasing their desperation and fear of complications.

Scene 48
Slugline: INT. SLEEP POD – DAY
Description: Birth intercut newsroom, TV.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Labor): Suli goes into labor, with the scene intercut with newsroom coverage.
Middle: (Struggle): They face physical and emotional struggles during the birth.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): The birth is successful, providing a climactic moment of hope.

Scene 49
Slugline: EXT. BUBBLE – DAY
Description: Shuttle gains access. General chaos.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Contact): The shuttle gains access to the Bubble, creating chaos.
Middle: (Technical Challenges): They face technical challenges as they attempt to dock.
Ending: (Relief): They successfully make contact, feeling a sense of relief.

Scene 50
Slugline: INT. BUBBLE – DAY
Description: Shuttle heads home.
Key Moments:
Beginning: (Crisis to Resolution): The crisis ends as the shuttle prepares to head home.
Middle: (Recovery): The team undergoes emotional and physical recovery.
Ending: (Hope/Fear): They return safely, providing a hopeful and satisfying resolution.

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[Harry Harry Rankin]

Harry’s Scene Requirements

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: Creating the skeleton…
ACT ONE
Scene 1
Slugline: INT. WATERFALL – AFTERNOON
Description: Introduce Suli and Jon in a hilariously awkward training scenario, where they're both struggling with zero-gravity manoeuvres, but sparks fly between them nonetheless.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Meet protagonists to meet team. Starts with Suli and Jon struggling; ends with them forming a bond.
Essence: Intro to characters.
Conflict: Physical challenge, woman vs man.
Subtext: Women are as good as men.
Hope/Fear: To win challenge, but they came last.
Scene 2
Slugline: INT. TV CONTROL – DAY
Description: Discover reality TV show to win competition.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Meet antagonist. Discover funding crisis for space station and state of the world.
Essence: Meet antagonist and outline stakes.
Conflict: Team challenge.
Subtext: World in crisis. Funding problems with Space Station. Resort to TV trivia for funds.
Hope/Fear: Protagonists win competition. World erupts before space launch.
Scene 3
Slugline: INT. BUS – DAY
Description: Winners travel to training facility.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Anticipation.
Essence: Build excitement and show journey.
Conflict: Internal excitement vs external challenges.
Subtext: Funds not well spent years ago.
Hope/Fear: Locked compound because of why? Fear of people breaking in, or out?
Scene 4
Slugline: EXT. COMPOUND – DAY
Description: Intro to training.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: It’s going to be hard… and televised!
Essence: Set expectations for training and lack of privacy.
Conflict: No privacy from team, or the world.
Subtext: This project is incredibly important.
Hope/Fear: That the mission happens and is a conduit away from conflict for the world.
Scene 5
Slugline: INT. NEWSROOM – DAY
Description: Intern saves her job and gets commission to interview protagonist.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Secure job to gain access.
Essence: Establish outside perspective and connection to protagonist.
Conflict: Risk of losing job.
Subtext: An outside ear, and voice for protagonist.
Hope/Fear: To get behind-the-scenes direct access to space station or lose job.
Scene 6
Slugline: INT. POOL – DAY
Description: Training – but someone dies.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Training intensity revealed to a tragic event.
Essence: Show stakes of mission.
Conflict: Politician convinces leaders to televise against their intention.
Subtext: Not all eventualities are anticipated.
Hope/Fear: That the challenge will pass OK. That someone will be injured.
Scene 7
Slugline: INT. BAR – NIGHT
Description: Meet-up. Protagonists kiss. Instant news.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Move from professional to personal.
Essence: Build romance and tension.
Conflict: NDA/celibate clause signed.
Subtext: They will break the rules.
Hope/Fear: That they can continue the mission.
Scene 8
Slugline: EXT. ROCKY TERRAIN – DAY
Description: Training.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Engagement grows amid challenges.
Essence: Show their connection and political backdrop.
Conflict: Is a relationship possible.
Subtext: Desire.
Hope/Fear: That they will make it.
Scene 9
Slugline: INT. BRIEFING ROOM – DAY
Description: Intro to technical ‘Bubble’.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Introduction of key mission component.
Essence: Technical preparation.
Conflict: Understanding complex technology.
Subtext: Opportunity for advancement.
Hope/Fear: Successful integration into mission.
Scene 10
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Dad tells Jon his engagement is off.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Personal conflict.
Essence: Highlight personal stakes.
Conflict: Familial pressure.
Subtext: Relief.
Hope/Fear: That it’s not too late with Suli.
Scene 11
Slugline: INT. CANTEEN – DAY
Description: Jon flirts to re-claim Suli.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Rekindle romance.
Essence: Show determination and charm.
Conflict: Winning back trust.
Subtext: Jon wants Suli back.
Hope/Fear: That Suli will forgive and accept him.
Scene 12
Slugline: INT. DORMITORY – NIGHT
Description: Suli worried. Journalist says get on with relationship.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Reassurance and support.
Essence: Encourage personal choice.
Conflict: Internal doubt.
Subtext: Suli needs confidence.
Hope/Fear: That Suli will pursue happiness.
Scene 13
Slugline: INT. LOW ORBIT FLIGHT – DAY
Description: Training flight to sex.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: From professional to intimate.
Essence: Show their growing connection.
Conflict: Breaking rules for love.
Subtext: Intimacy vs duty.
Hope/Fear: That they won’t be discovered.
ACT TWO
Scene 14
Slugline: EXT. CANYON – DAY
Description: Warring tribes meet. Two different family backgrounds for barbecue in Bryce Canyon.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Cultural clash to tentative understanding.
Essence: Highlight diverse backgrounds.
Conflict: Cultural differences.
Subtext: Breaking rules.
Hope/Fear: That families will support.
Scene 15
Slugline: INT. PLANE – DAY
Description: Technical check on weightless plane. Technician finds condom.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Discovery to moral decision.
Essence: Highlight consequences of actions.
Conflict: Should he report it.
Subtext: Man to man understanding.
Hope/Fear: That not reporting may cost his job.
Scene 16
Slugline: INT. MEDICAL FACILITY – DAY
Description: Final medical exam but leaves before result.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Suspense to revelation.
Essence: Introduce pregnancy plot.
Conflict: Nurse discovers something but keeps it quiet.
Subtext: Nurse sympathetic.
Hope/Fear: That flight will be quick and mission over soon, no harm to fetus.
Scene 17
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Nurse tells controller and politician, but they say go ahead, but keep quiet.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Disclosure to conspiracy.
Essence: Show internal conflict and stakes.
Conflict: Nurse worried about job.
Subtext: She is letting Suli down.
Hope/Fear: That being further than expected could be dangerous.
Scene 18
Slugline: EXT. BUBBLE – DAY
Description: Successful docking and entry.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Successful mission phase.
Essence: Show progress.
Conflict: Technical challenges.
Subtext: Relief and pride.
Hope/Fear: That mission will proceed smoothly.
Scene 19
Slugline: INT. GALLEY – DAY
Description: Fun with gravity switch – food fight.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Tension to release.
Essence: Show camaraderie.
Conflict: Managing zero-gravity.
Subtext: Team bonding.
Hope/Fear: That team will work well together.
Scene 20
Slugline: INT. GREENHOUSE POD – DAY
Description: Suli tends plants, gets morning sickness.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Routine to problem.
Essence: Reveal pregnancy symptoms.
Conflict: Hiding the pregnancy.
Subtext: Personal challenge.
Hope/Fear: That symptoms will go unnoticed.
Scene 21
Slugline: INT. GALLEY – DAY
Description: Discuss food standards. Payload itinerary.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Planning to concern.
Essence: Highlight logistical challenges.
Conflict: Managing limited resources.
Subtext: Long-term survival.
Hope/Fear: That they will have enough supplies.
Scene 22
Slugline: INT. NEWSROOM – DAY
Description: Global conflict/warming issue.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Informative to alarming.
Essence: Show Earth’s crisis.
Conflict: Climate change and unrest.
Subtext: High stakes back home.
Hope/Fear: War?
Scene 23
Slugline: INT. FLEUR’S OFFICE – DAY
Description: Machinations regarding profiteering from war.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Strategy to greed.
Essence: Reveal antagonist's motives.
Conflict: Ethical vs profitable.
Subtext: Moral corruption.
Hope/Fear: That profiteers will succeed.
Scene 24
Slugline: INT. FLIGHTDECK – DAY
Description: Drone crashes killing all team except Jon & Suli.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Disaster to survival.
Essence: Heighten stakes and isolate protagonists.
Conflict: Life-threatening crisis.
Subtext: Fragility of mission.
Hope/Fear: That Jon and Suli will survive.
ACT THREE
Scene 25
Slugline: INT. CONTROL ROOM – DAY
Description: Crash breaks news across the world.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Tragedy to global awareness.
Essence: Show global impact.
Conflict: Media frenzy.
Subtext: Public scrutiny.
Hope/Fear: That rescue efforts will be swift.
Scene 26
Slugline: EXT. TRAILER PARK – DAY
Description: Kate interviews Zoe’s Mum. “I used to live just over there.”
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Personal connection to broader narrative.
Essence: Humanize the story.
Conflict: Emotional revelations.
Subtext: Past hardships.
Hope/Fear: That interview will shed light on situation.
Scene 27
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Organize rescue mission.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Planning to execution.
Essence: Show effort to save.
Conflict: Logistical and political hurdles.
Subtext: Coordination and urgency.
Hope/Fear: That rescue mission will succeed.
Scene 28
Slugline: INT. CONTROL ROOM – DAY
Description: Nurse tells Suli she is pregnant. Jon doesn’t hear, but the world does.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Revelation to public knowledge.
Essence: Heighten emotional stakes.
Conflict: Public reaction and personal privacy.
Subtext: Vulnerability.
Hope/Fear: That Suli will handle pressure.
Scene 29
Slugline: INT. SLEEP POD – NIGHT
Description: Suli tells Jon. Last to know – huff.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Communication breakdown to understanding.
Essence: Show relationship strain.
Conflict: Emotional hurt.
Subtext: Importance of trust.
Hope/Fear: That they will reconcile.
Scene 30
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Fleet grounded for safety checks.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Setback to determination.
Essence: Show external challenges.
Conflict: Bureaucratic delays.
Subtext: Safety vs urgency.
Hope/Fear: That fleet will resume quickly.
Scene 31
Slugline: INT. MEDICAL FACILITY – DAY
Description: Cover-up of pregnancy exposed.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Secret revealed to accountability.
Essence: Uncover deception.
Conflict: Ethical breach.
Subtext: Trust issues.
Hope/Fear: That consequences will be just.
Scene 32
Slugline: EXT. TRAILER PARK – DAY
Description: Mum demonstration with Suli 8mm films.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Nostalgia to activism.
Essence: Show personal impact.
Conflict: Emotional expression.
Subtext: Personal history.
Hope/Fear: That demonstration will garner support.
Scene 33
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Backup team prepared for rescue mission.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Preparation to action.
Essence: Show readiness.
Conflict: Coordination.
Subtext: Teamwork.
Hope/Fear: That backup mission will succeed.
Scene 34
Slugline: EXT. SENATE BUILDING – DAY
Description: Blackmail attempt to sabotage mission.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Threat to resistance.
Essence: Show political intrigue.
Conflict: Ethical dilemma.
Subtext: Power struggle.
Hope/Fear: That blackmail will fail.
Scene 35
Slugline: INT. BUBBLE – DAY
Description: Journalist anchor as shuttle approaches. Wave at window.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Hope to disappointment.
Essence: Build anticipation.
Conflict: Access denied.
Subtext: Isolation.
Hope/Fear: That rescue will succeed.
ACT FOUR
Scene 36
Slugline: INT. DENNIS OFFICE – DAY
Description: Controller now blackmails politician with recording.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Leverage to action.
Essence: Turn tables.
Conflict: Ethical compromise.
Subtext: Desperation.
Hope/Fear: Pay for real rescue.
Scene 37
Slugline: INT. BUBBLE – DAY
Description: Suli and Jon play I-spy.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Boredom to bonding.
Essence: Show their relationship.
Conflict: Monotony.
Subtext: Coping mechanisms.
Hope/Fear: That they stay connected.
Scene 38
Slugline: INT. SLEEP POD – NIGHT
Description: Gravity hi-jinks in shower. Love. Journalist covers!
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Fun to intimacy.
Essence: Show their love.
Conflict: Privacy vs public.
Subtext: Intimacy.
Hope/Fear: That their love endures.
Scene 39
Slugline: INT. NEWSROOM – DAY
Description: Global support.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Concern to solidarity.
Essence: Show global unity.
Conflict: Differing opinions.
Subtext: Collective effort.
Hope/Fear: That support remains strong.
Scene 40
Slugline: INT. SLEEP POD – NIGHT
Description: Nesting. Curtains – nobody can see.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Preparation to privacy.
Essence: Create a safe space.
Conflict: Isolation vs connection.
Subtext: Security.
Hope/Fear: That they feel safe.
Scene 41
Slugline: INT. FLIGHTDECK – DAY
Description: Labor pains.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Calm to crisis.
Essence: Escalate tension.
Conflict: Physical pain.
Subtext: Urgency.
Hope/Fear: That labor progresses safely.
Scene 42
Slugline: INT. MEDICAL FACILITY – DAY
Description: Nurse and journalist talk.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Information to strategy.
Essence: Share critical info.
Conflict: Trust issues.
Subtext: Collaboration.
Hope/Fear: That plan works.
Scene 43
Slugline: INT. GALLEY – DAY
Description: Jon boils water.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Preparation to readiness.
Essence: Show involvement.
Conflict: Resource management.
Subtext: Anticipation.
Hope/Fear: That he is useful.
Scene 44
Slugline: INT. NEWSROOM – DAY
Description: World experts offer conflicting advice.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Chaos to unity.
Essence: Show global stakes.
Conflict: Conflicting opinions.
Subtext: Cooperation.
Hope/Fear: That right decisions are made.
Scene 45
Slugline: INT. SLEEP POD – NIGHT
Description: Swearing practice in different languages. Journalist covers.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Tension to humor.
Essence: Lighten mood.
Conflict: Emotional stress.
Subtext: Cultural exchange.
Hope/Fear: That humor eases tension.
Scene 46
Slugline: EXT. LAUNCH PAD – DAY
Description: Final rescue launch.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Launch to mission.
Essence: Build anticipation.
Conflict: Technical issues.
Subtext: Determination.
Hope/Fear: That rescue is successful.
Scene 47
Slugline: INT. BUBBLE HOSPITAL BAY – DAY
Description: They don’t like the look of the birthing bed/stirrups etc. Loads too much advice from ‘experts’ on Earth. Try turning off gravity to help. It doesn’t.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Discomfort to adaptation.
Essence: Show desperation.
Conflict: Physical discomfort.
Subtext: Helplessness.
Hope/Fear: That they find a solution.
Scene 48
Slugline: INT. SLEEP POD – DAY
Description: Birth intercut newsroom, TV.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Labor to birth.
Essence: Show climax.
Conflict: Physical and emotional struggle.
Subtext: Hope.
Hope/Fear: That birth is successful.
Scene 49
Slugline: EXT. BUBBLE – DAY
Description: Shuttle gains access. General chaos.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Isolation to contact.
Essence: Show transition.
Conflict: Technical challenges.
Subtext: Relief.
Hope/Fear: That contact is maintained.

Scene 50
Slugline: INT. BUBBLE – DAY
Description: Shuttle heads home.
Scene Requirements:
Scene Arc: Crisis to resolution.
Essence: Show end of journey.
Conflict: Emotional and physical recovery.
Subtext: Hope.
Hope/Fear: That they return safely.
This detailed scene breakdown ensures each scene in "Genesis" has clear requirements, driving the narrative forward with emotional depth and intrigue.

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• This reply was modified 1 year, 1 month ago by  Harry Harry Rankin.

[Harry Harry Rankin]

My name is Harry Rankin. (For some reason I am registered by my given name, Anthony!)
I have written seven full scripts. Concepts for many more, and have one optioned.
I hope to re-work one of my earliest scripts in this class and bring it up to presentation standard.
I live on a boat on the river Thames in London. I’m hoping that it brings good omens as Simon Beaufoy did too, until he won an Oscar for Slumdog Millionaire…

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[Harry Harry Rankin]

Harry (Anthony) Rankin
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[Harry Harry Rankin]

Harry’s Intriguing Moments

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: One

Act 1:
Opening:
Intrigue: During the training scenario, Suli notices Nancy whispering urgently to another medic, hinting at something important.
How it plays out: Suli’s curiosity is piqued as she catches glimpses of the conversation but doesn’t hear enough to understand what’s going on. This moment sets up the secretive nature of Nancy’s involvement.
Secret: Jon is seen working on a small device in his quarters, quickly hiding it when Suli enters.
How it plays out: Jon’s secretive actions create an air of mystery about what he’s building and why he’s keeping it hidden from Suli, hinting at his covert agenda.
Covert Agenda: Harrison, during a press conference, subtly manipulates the narrative about the space mission, framing it as a beacon of hope amid global unrest.
How it plays out: The audience sees Harrison’s skill in controlling public perception, setting up his ulterior motives and the impact of his actions on the mission.
Hidden Identity: Suli overhears a conversation about a past incident involving Nancy but doesn’t get the full details, planting seeds of curiosity.
How it plays out: Suli makes a mental note to ask Nancy about it later, introducing the theme of hidden pasts and setting up future revelations.
Inciting Incident:
Intrigue: Suli and Jon navigate the comedic mishaps of their love affair in space, but Suli notices Nancy acting unusually attentive and cautious around her.
How it plays out: Nancy’s behavior raises questions for Suli, who starts to wonder if there’s more to her actions than just medical concern.
Secret: Jon reveals to the audience (but not to Suli) that he has a hidden stash of emergency supplies he’s been gathering.
How it plays out: Jon’s covert preparations hint at his deep-seated fears and his need to protect Suli, even if she doesn’t know about it.
Covert Agenda: Harrison receives a private communication from an unknown source, discussing plans that could impact the mission.
How it plays out: The audience learns that Harrison is orchestrating something behind the scenes, adding tension and anticipation for what’s to come.
Cover Up: Suli suspects that something is off with the mission’s communication systems, but when she brings it up, her concerns are quickly dismissed by command.
How it plays out: This dismissal makes Suli even more determined to find out what’s being hidden, hinting at larger conspiracies at play.
Turning Point:
Intrigue: Suli discovers a hidden compartment in the ISS containing documents about the mission’s true objectives.
How it plays out: As she reads through the documents, her confusion and concern grow, realizing that there are aspects of the mission she was not told about.
Secret: Jon accidentally discovers Nancy’s secret file on Suli’s pregnancy while searching for medical supplies.
How it plays out: Jon confronts Nancy, leading to a tense exchange where Nancy reveals her reasons for keeping it secret, deepening the intrigue.
Covert Agenda: Harrison makes a cryptic call to a high-ranking official, discussing “contingency plans” if the mission goes off course.
How it plays out: The audience gets a glimpse of Harrison’s broader scheme and his willingness to manipulate events to his advantage.
Conspiracy: Suli and Jon stumble upon encrypted messages indicating that the mission might have been sabotaged.
How it plays out: They decide to investigate further, setting up a subplot of uncovering the conspiracy and adding layers to their personal and professional dilemmas.
Act 2:
New Plan:
Intrigue: Suli reveals her pregnancy to Jon, leading to a series of humorous and desperate attempts to hide it from their colleagues.
How it plays out: They create a plan to cover up the symptoms, leading to funny and awkward situations that also deepen their bond.
Secret: Nancy covertly modifies medical records to hide Suli’s pregnancy from the mission control team.
How it plays out: Nancy’s actions are seen by the audience but not by other characters, creating tension around whether her deception will be discovered.
Covert Agenda: Jon starts implementing his secret makeshift survival plan, unbeknownst to Suli, using his engineering skills to prepare for worst-case scenarios.
How it plays out: The audience sees Jon working late at night, testing and refining his devices, hinting at his deep concerns and resourcefulness.
Cover Up: Harrison orders the suppression of any news about potential risks related to the mission, ensuring that the public remains in the dark.
How it plays out: Harrison’s manipulation of the media is shown through a montage of news clips, highlighting his control and the stakes involved.
Plan in Action:
Intrigue: Suli notices discrepancies in the mission logs and starts investigating, leading to a deeper understanding of the underlying issues.
How it plays out: Suli’s detective work uncovers small but significant clues, making her realize that their mission might not be what it seems.
Secret: Jon confides in Nancy about his fears and the secret plan he’s been working on, seeking her advice.
How it plays out: Nancy supports Jon’s efforts, sharing her own insights and creating a covert alliance between them to protect Suli.
Covert Agenda: Harrison’s plan starts to unravel as unexpected complications arise, forcing him to take more drastic measures.
How it plays out: Harrison is seen making frantic calls and issuing commands, his calm facade cracking under pressure.
Conspiracy: Suli and Jon decode part of the encrypted messages, revealing that there is indeed a plot against the mission.
How it plays out: Their discovery leads to a tense and secretive discussion about how to proceed without alerting the wrong people.
Midpoint Turning Point:
Intrigue: The crash of the delivery drone shuttle forces Suli and Jon to confront the reality of their isolation and the possibility of sabotage.
How it plays out: The crash is shown in a dramatic and chaotic sequence, with Suli and Jon’s reactions highlighting their fear and determination.
Secret: Jon’s hidden stash of emergency supplies becomes crucial, revealing his foresight and deep concern for their safety.
How it plays out: Jon reveals the supplies to Suli, who is initially shocked but then grateful for his preparation, strengthening their bond.
Covert Agenda: Nancy takes risky measures to keep Suli’s pregnancy safe, including modifying the station’s medical equipment.
How it plays out: Nancy’s actions are shown in a series of tense scenes, with her constantly looking over her shoulder, aware of the risks.
Conspiracy: Suli and Jon decide to confront Harrison’s involvement directly, using their encrypted communications to send a coded message to Earth.
How it plays out: The message is crafted carefully, with the hope that someone trustworthy on Earth will decode it and act on their behalf.
Act 3:
Rethink Everything:
Intrigue: Suli and Jon find a hidden compartment in the ISS with supplies and documents suggesting there’s more support available than they were led to believe.
How it plays out: The discovery raises new questions about who put the supplies there and why, adding layers of mystery to their situation.
Secret: Jon finally shares his secret makeshift plan with Suli, leading to a mix of relief and frustration from her.
How it plays out: The revelation sparks a deep and emotional conversation about trust, survival, and their future together.
Covert Agenda: Nancy begins to communicate with a trusted contact on Earth to arrange a secret plan for their safe return.
How it plays out: The audience sees Nancy’s careful and covert communication efforts, knowing that any misstep could jeopardize everything.
Conspiracy: Suli and Jon piece together more clues, realizing that Harrison’s involvement is deeper than they thought, and they plan their next move.
How it plays out: Their discussions and planning are intercut with scenes of Harrison growing increasingly paranoid, building tension.
New Plan:
Intrigue: Suli and Jon start executing their new plan, using the hidden supplies and Nancy’s covert help to prepare for the baby’s arrival.
How it plays out: The preparation scenes are a mix of humor and tension, with Suli and Jon working together seamlessly despite the odds.
Secret: Jon discovers a hidden message from an unknown source that offers a cryptic hint about the mission’s true purpose.
How it plays out: The message leads to a series of investigative scenes, with Jon trying to decode its meaning and implications.
Covert Agenda: Harrison ramps up his efforts to control the narrative, using his influence to manipulate public opinion and obscure the truth.
How it plays out: Harrison’s media manipulations are shown through news reports and social media trends, contrasting with the reality of Suli and Jon’s situation.
Conspiracy: Suli and Jon make a breakthrough in their investigation, discovering evidence that could expose Harrison’s entire scheme.
How it plays out: The discovery is dramatic and intense, with Suli and Jon realizing the gravity of their findings and the danger they are in.
Turning Point:
Intrigue: A message from Earth warns Suli and Jon about an imminent threat, pushing them to act quickly.
How it plays out: The message creates a sense of urgency, leading to a flurry of activity and planning as they prepare for the worst.
Secret: Nancy reveals a personal secret that changes the dynamics of their relationship and gives them new hope.
How it plays out: The revelation is emotional and cathartic, offering a deeper understanding of Nancy’s motivations and creating a stronger bond among the characters.
Covert Agenda: Jon’s secret plan faces a major setback, forcing him to rethink his approach and adapt quickly.
How it plays out: The setback is shown in a tense and dramatic scene, with Jon scrambling to find a new solution under pressure.
Conspiracy: Suli and Jon decide to go public with their findings, hoping to expose Harrison and garner global support.
How it plays out: Their decision is made in a dramatic and emotional scene, setting the stage for the final act and the ultimate showdown.
Act 4:
Climax/Ultimate Expression of the Conflict:
Intrigue: As Suli goes into labor, they discover that Harrison’s reach extends further than they thought, creating new dangers.
How it plays out: The labor is intense and filled with suspense, with the added intrigue of new threats emerging at the worst possible time.
Secret: Jon reveals a final, hidden aspect of his plan that could ensure their safety and the baby’s successful birth.
How it plays out: The reveal is dramatic and hopeful, with Jon’s ingenuity shining through as he implements the final steps of his plan.
Covert Agenda: Nancy enacts a risky maneuver to protect the baby and ensure Suli’s safety during childbirth.
How it plays out: Nancy’s actions are shown in a series of tense and heroic scenes, highlighting her dedication and bravery.
Conspiracy: The truth about Harrison’s involvement is broadcasted globally, leading to a dramatic shift in public perception and support.
How it plays out: The broadcast is a turning point, with people around the world reacting in real-time, and Harrison facing the consequences of his actions.
Resolution:
Intrigue: The world’s reaction to the birth and the revelations about Harrison’s conspiracy lead to widespread change and new initiatives.
How it plays out: The resolution shows news reports and social media posts, highlighting the global impact of Suli and Jon’s story.
Secret: Nancy reveals her full story to the public, becoming a symbol of resilience and hope.
How it plays out: Nancy’s public revelation is emotional and powerful, providing closure and inspiring others.
Covert Agenda: Harrison’s downfall is shown through a series of legal and political consequences, finally bringing justice.
How it plays out: Harrison’s arrest and the dismantling of his network are shown in a dramatic montage, emphasizing the impact of Suli and Jon’s actions.
Mystery: The final scenes hint at the enduring mystery of space exploration and the ongoing journey of Suli, Jon, and their baby.
How it plays out: The film ends with a hopeful and mysterious tone, showing Suli, Jon, and their baby looking out at the stars, ready for whatever comes next.

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Harry’s Emotional Moments

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: One can get carried way with creating too much detail. I feel it better to keep the plot a bit looser here.

Act 1:
Bonding: Jon meets Suli
Excitement: Mission selection

Courage: Suli decides to confide in the unit nurse, Nancy, about her past abortion, showing courage and vulnerability.
How it plays out: In a private conversation, Suli hesitantly opens up to Nancy, who listens with empathy and reassures her, strengthening their bond.
Distress: Suli and Jon face the reality of leaving Earth, feeling the weight of their responsibilities.
How it plays out: As they look out the window at the receding Earth, they hold hands, their expressions a mix of awe and anxiety.
Hidden Weakness: Suli secretly doubts the mission’s success, causing her to take extra precautions.
How it plays out: Suli quietly adjusts settings and protocols while Jon watches, sensing her unease but not fully understanding it.

Act 2:
Emotional Dilemma: Suli and Jon debate whether to reveal the pregnancy, torn between duty and personal safety.
How it plays out: In a tense and emotional discussion, they weigh the risks, their love and fear evident in their voices and expressions.
Bonding: Nancy supports Suli, sharing her own experiences and fears, strengthening their bond.
How it plays out: Nancy comforts Suli, sharing stories of her own hardships, and they find solace in each other’s strength and understanding.
Distress: Jon struggles to keep the pregnancy a secret, feeling the weight of his protective instincts.
How it plays out: Jon nervously covers for Suli during a medical check, his anxiety and concern palpable.
Comedy: Their attempts to hide the pregnancy lead to humorous situations, such as morning sickness in zero gravity.
How it plays out: Suli floats around, trying to hide her nausea, while Jon awkwardly distracts their colleagues with absurd stories.
Courage: Suli bravely continues her duties despite the pregnancy, showing determination and resilience.
How it plays out: Suli completes a complex task while concealing her pregnancy, her face set in determination despite the physical strain.
Bonding: Jon secretly works on makeshift solutions to support Suli, deepening their partnership.
How it plays out: Jon modifies equipment to help Suli, and she smiles gratefully, their bond strengthening with each supportive gesture.
Surprise: Suli and Jon share a light-hearted moment of joy, feeling their baby’s first movements.
How it plays out: They place their hands on Suli’s belly, laughing and marveling at the tiny kicks, their faces glowing with love and wonder.
Distress: The crash of the delivery drone shuttle leaves them stranded, their fear and anxiety heightening.
How it plays out: The crash rocks the ISS, and Suli and Jon’s faces fill with panic as they realize their dire situation.

Act 3:
Comedy: They try to create makeshift baby supplies from space station equipment, leading to humorous moments.
How it plays out: Jon proudly presents a makeshift diaper made from space blankets, and Suli bursts into laughter, easing the tension.
Surprise: Suli and Jon discover a hidden stash of supplies, giving them a brief moment of hope and excitement.
How it plays out: They excitedly rummage through the supplies, their faces lighting up with joy and relief.
Distress: They face a major setback when their makeshift plan fails, leading to a moment of despair.
How it plays out: The failure hits them hard, and they share a moment of silent, mutual grief, their faces reflecting their despair.
Hidden Weakness: Jon’s overprotectiveness leads to a heated argument, revealing the strain on their relationship.
How it plays out: Voices raised, they confront their fears and insecurities, their love tested but ultimately strengthened.
Betrayal: Harrison’s involvement in the shuttle crash is revealed, shaking their trust in the mission.
How it plays out: A message from Earth exposes Harrison’s betrayal, and Suli and Jon’s faces fill with shock and anger.
Emotional Dilemma: Suli must decide whether to confront Harrison’s betrayal publicly or keep it hidden for their safety.
How it plays out: Suli and Jon debate the best course of action, their moral convictions clashing with their survival instincts.
Courage: Suli chooses to confront Harrison, risking everything to expose the truth.
How it plays out: Suli records a message revealing the truth, her voice steady and resolute despite the danger.
Bonding: Suli and Jon find strength in each other, their love unwavering in the face of adversity.
How it plays out: They hold each other close, their faces filled with determination and love, ready to face whatever comes next.

Act 4:
Courage: Suli bravely faces childbirth in orbit, supported by Jon and Nancy.
How it plays out: Amidst the chaos, Suli’s determination shines through as she prepares for the birth, her face a mix of pain and resolve.
Bonding: Jon and Suli share a profound moment of connection as they welcome their baby boy.
How it plays out: Tears of joy and relief stream down their faces as they hold their newborn, their bond stronger than ever.
Success/Winning: They successfully deliver the baby, symbolizing hope and new beginnings.
How it plays out: The successful birth is met with cheers and congratulations from Earth, their triumph celebrated worldwide.
Surprise: The world’s reaction to their story brings an unexpected wave of support and admiration.
How it plays out: Messages of support flood in from around the globe, their faces lighting up with joy and pride.

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Harry’s Reveals!

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: Int

Setup: Suli’s Ma growing cuttings discusses water
Reveal: Suli on space station hydroponics

Setup: Jon Sports fixture, is it Harrison urging onwards?
Reveal: Picture in Harrison’s Office

Setup: Jon disables camera
Reveal: Technician finds condom

Setup: Harrison deal with arms co
Reveal: Arms co sabotage shuttle

Setup: Jon resistance to talk about family
Reveal: Harrison is related

Setup: Pre-flight scan
Reveal: Suli teen abortion

Setup: Nancy hides scan print from Suli
Reveal: Pregnancy

Setup: Morning sickness
Reveal: Nancy reveals pregnancy via ‘private’ comms link – intercepted. Jon not in loop!

Setup: Crop failure
Reveal: Bugs

Setup: Jon fiddles with shower
Reveal: Shower antics – cold – linked to below

Setup: Suli fiddles with gravity drive
Reveal: Jon’s shower is chaos – Linked to above

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Harry’s Character Action Tracks!

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: Intriguing to get the actions up front as a guide!

Character Actions for “Genesis"

Character: SULI
Act 1:
Training Camp: Suli goes above and beyond in her training, taking extra precautions and measures that aren't always approved by command, showcasing her determination and hidden doubts about the mission’s success.
Pool Rescue: Demonstrates altruism and leadership by organizing an impromptu team-building exercise, which earns her respect from her peers.
Rival challenge: Makes a point of upstaging rival.
Weightless Sex: Initiates a romantic moment with Jon, revealing her impulsive side but also deepening their bond.
Act 2:
Mission Commences: Suli secretly modifies some of the mission protocols to ensure extra safety, reflecting her overthinking and need to be perfect.
Discovering Pregnancy: Keeps her pregnancy hidden, only confiding in the unit nurse, showcasing her resilience and fear of not being good enough.
Drone Crash: Takes charge during the immediate aftermath, organizing their limited resources and coming up with makeshift solutions to maintain life support systems.
Act 3:
Rethink Everything: Suli devises innovative methods to prolong their food and water supplies, reflecting her serious, responsible approach to survival.
Facing Setbacks: Encourages Jon to share his secret plan, demonstrating her evolving role as a leader and her ability to trust others.
Confronting Fears: Has a heart-to-heart with Jon about her past abortion, showcasing her growth in emotional maturity and willingness to face her fears.
Act 4:
Climax (Birth): Suli takes control of the situation, using her training and newfound wisdom to successfully deliver the baby, symbolizing her transformation into a cautious, forward-thinking mother.
Weightless: fun.
Resolution: Proposes a new scientific initiative to use their experience for future space missions, highlighting her evolved role as a leader and a symbol of hope.

Character: JON
Act 1:
Training Camp: Uses humor and inventiveness to build camaraderie among the team, showcasing his likability and team player nature.
Pool Rescue: Demonstrates his protective instincts by saving Suli, hinting at his deeper feelings for her.
Weightless Sex: Participates in the romantic encounter with Suli, reflecting his happy-go-lucky and adventurous spirit. Disables cameras.
Act 2:
Mission Commences: Starts secretly working on a backup plan for survival, driven by his protective instincts and fear of failure.
Discovering Pregnancy: Supports Suli’s decision to keep the pregnancy hidden, showing his trust and protective nature.
Drone Crash: Uses his engineering skills to repair critical systems, showcasing his ingenuity and determination to ensure their survival.
Act 3:
Rethink Everything: Collaborates with Suli on devising new strategies for survival, demonstrating his growth from a nerd to an achiever.
Facing Setbacks: Shares his secret plan with Suli, showing his trust in her abilities and their deepening bond.
Confronting Fears: Opens up about his fears of being a father and his past rejection, highlighting his emotional growth.
Act 4:
Climax (Birth): Acts as Suli’s support system during the childbirth, using his technical skills to assist in any way possible.
Resolution: Proposes new engineering solutions to improve future space missions, showcasing his evolution into a respected achiever and innovator.

Character: HARRISON
Act 1:
Training Camp: Manipulates media coverage to highlight his involvement and support for the space mission, bolstering his public image.
Pool Rescue: Uses the incident to further his political agenda, showcasing his charisma and manipulative nature.
Blanked cameras: Monitors the astronauts closely, looking for any opportunity to exploit their actions for his gain.
Act 2:
Mission Commences: Orchestrates behind-the-scenes maneuvers to ensure the mission fails, to align with his broader political goals.
Discovering Pregnancy: Leaks subtle hints to the press about potential issues with the mission, increasing public interest and tension.
Drone Crash: Sees the crash as an opportunity, using his connections to manipulate the narrative and position himself as a concerned leader.
Act 3:
Rethink Everything: Doubles down on his manipulation, pushing a narrative that emphasizes the importance of the mission for humanity’s future.
Facing Setbacks: Faces internal political pressure and potential exposure of his involvement, leading him to take riskier actions to maintain control.
Confronting Fears: Experiences moments of doubt and regret, revealing his hidden vulnerabilities and the weight of his actions.
Act 4:
Climax (Birth): Tries to spin the birth as a monumental event for his political gain, but starts to lose control over the narrative.
Resolution: Faces exposure and potential downfall as Suli and Jon’s true story comes to light, leading to his eventual weakening and imprisonment.

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Beat Outline for Genesis with Layers
Beginning: Training Camp
Introduce Suli and Jon, their relationship, and their ambitions.
Establish their personal backgrounds and hidden agendas.
Show the rigorous training for the International Launch Project.
Nancy background
Harrison on TV
Apathy in world
Inciting Incident: Pool Rescue
During a training exercise, Jon saves Suli from a near-drowning incident in the training pool.
Maybe second love interest? Ethnicity, arrogance? WASP or something
Their bond deepens, hinting at the romantic and professional connection they share.
Turning Point 1: Weightless Sex
In a moment of passion and spontaneity, Suli and Jon consummate their love in zero gravity during a training simulation.
This act introduces the potential for pregnancy, complicating their mission.
Act 2: Mission Commences
Suli and Jon, now officially part of the space mission, embark on their journey to the International Space Station (ISS). Perfect launch – no problems ahead!
Nancy in the know!
Harrison connivance in shuttle sabotage
Establish the excitement and challenges of the mission, along with the tension between characters.
Maybe second love interest interferes – reflect tensions on Earth
Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: Crash
A catastrophic event occurs: the delivery drone shuttle crashes, leaving Suli and Jon stranded and isolated in space.
This incident forces them to confront the reality of their situation and rely on each other for survival.
Act 3: Pregnancy Announced
Suli discovers she is pregnant, which adds a new layer of urgency and danger to their predicament.
Harrison fights press
The news of the pregnancy is communicated back to Earth, drawing global attention to their situation.
Turning Point 3: Rescue Fails
An attempted rescue mission fails due to sabotage or unforeseen complications.
Suli and Jon must devise a new plan to ensure their survival and safe return, facing their biggest challenge yet.
Act 4 Climax: Birth
Suli goes into labor, and with Jon's help, gives birth to their baby boy in the midst of the chaos.
This moment symbolizes hope and new beginnings for both the couple and humanity.
Resolution: What Happens Now…? (Messiah Moment)
The world watches as Suli and Jon, with their newborn child, navigate their new reality.
The couple becomes a symbol of hope and resilience, inspiring a global shift in perspective towards unity and survival.
Harrison's involvement in the shuttle crash is revealed, exposing his true motives and leading to his downfall.
The birth of the child becomes a turning point for humanity, suggesting a new beginning or "messiah" for the troubled world.

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Harry’s Beat Sheet – Draft 1

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: This is beginning to take some sort of shape!

Title: Genesis
Genre: Comedy, Drama

Act 1: Intro to main characters, including World tension. Antag speech.
Inciting Incident: Pool rescue
Turning Point: Sex in Space (subtext) whilst world prepares for war
Protag. Journey: Blinkers on!
Antag. Journey: Gleeful hand rubbing (re war)
Deeper: rising tension. Politicians clash
Act 2: Mission commences..
PJ: Assigned roles. General shenanigans with crew
AJ: Engineers discontent and sabotage of shuttle
Deeper: Nurse aware
Mid-Point: Crash
Act 3: Announce advanced pregnancy.
PJ: Rethink. Life alone.
AJ: Contracts signed
Deeper: Tensions ramping up halted as pregnancy televised (whenever complications arise interrupts new tension)

Turning Point: Failed rescue
Act 4: Birth
PJ: Fight despair. Find each other’s strengths
AJ: Hope!
Deeper: fingernails wearing down…
Resolution: Return home?
PJ: new challenge
AJ: Exposed. (will he get away with it)
Deeper: Peace potential…. (But maybe not)

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Harry’s Deeper Layer!

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: This feels like the foundational building block.

Surface Layer: The happy couple are on the space mission, but an accident leaves them alone and expecting a birth.
Deeper Layer: The world has been descending into a spiral of territorial disputes, all based around financial reward. Extremes of capitalism have rendered the climate toxic and stress levels are so high that war is beginning to break out everywhere.
Major Reveal: Harrison is behind the shuttle crash
Influences Surface Story: Folk on earth are desperate for release from tension. What they get is a re-focus. On the origins of mankind and what we should all be striving for.
Hints: Press announcements. Hints from Harrison’s press secretary. Unit nurse’s wholesomeness.
Changes Reality: What humanity needs is a way off planet. What we are going to get is a new messiah?

Beginning: Training camp
Inciting Incident: Pool rescue
Turning Point 1: Weightless sex
Act 2: Mission commences
Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: Crash
Act 3: Pregnancy announced
Turning Point 3: Rescue fails
Act 4 Climax: Birth
Resolution: What happens now…? (ie messiah moment)

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Harry’s Character Structure

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: Thinking about the individual structure of my main characters will help plot their actions and reactions in an orderly manner.

SULI – Protagonist
Beginning: Arrives at Training
Inciting Incident: Nearly drowns in pool
Turning Point 1: Sex in Space
Act 2: Mission starts
Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: Crash!
Act 3: Pregnancy
Turning Point 3: Rescue fails
Act 4 Climax: Birth
Resolution: Prepare to return

JON – Protagonist
Beginning: Arrives at Training
Inciting Incident: Saves Suli in pool
Turning Point 1: Sex in Space
Act 2: Mission starts
Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: Crash!
Act 3: Pregnancy
Turning Point 3: Rescue fails
Act 4 Climax: Birth
Resolution: Prepare to return

HARRISON – Antagonist
Beginning: Runs for President
Inciting Incident: Fails to become President
Turning Point 1: Approached by arms coalition
Act 2: Fosters ill content globally
Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: Space launch seems positive
Act 3: Attempts to block space mission
Turning Point 3: Engineers crash
Act 4 Climax: Outed by press secretary and Press corps
Resolution: Exiled…. or is he…?

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Harry’s Supporting Characters

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, so to make award-winning work and create a lifestyle which is confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: The team is (nearly) assembled!

Support 1:
Name: Megan
Role: Suli’s closest friend – on Earth
Main purpose: Confidant
Value: To allow Suli to vent and to gain information

Support 2:
Name: Roger
Role: Phys Ed instructor
Main purpose: Foil for Jon, suited for Suli
Value: To give Jon a direct adversary

Support 3:
Name: Esan
Role: Press secretary for Harrison
Main purpose: To cover up his machinations… and to leak to the press the truth!
Value: Whistle-blower

Support 4:
Name: Mary
Role: Jon’s mother
Main purpose: Guilt trip! (devout catholic)
Value: More for Jon to worry about

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Harry’s Character Profiles Part 2

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, so to make award-winning work and create a lifestyle which is confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: The more detail, the easier to comprehend.

SULI
A. The High Concept. An accident on a space mission becomes the focus for the warring world when an astronaut’s pregnancy is revealed and rescue is impossible.
B. This character’s journey. From idealistic, quiet flippant girl to serious, responsible woman
C. The Actor Attractors for this character. Fun, great drama, first birth in space!

Role in the Story: Protagonist
Age range: 26-36
Description: Mixed race, Asian/American
Core Traits: Dogged, determined
Motivation – Want:
Motivation – Need:
Wound: Teen abortion
Likability: Altruism, Genuine, Resilient
Relatability: Moral challenge, Personal dreams
Empathy: Warmth, Physical challenge in the public eye.
Character Subtext: As she had a teen abortion, she is hiding her fear of not being good enough – as an astronaut and a mother.
Character Intrigue: She secretly doubts the mission’s success, causing her to take extra precautions that aren’t always approved by command.
Flaw: Her need to be perfect leads to overthinking and second-guessing critical decisions.
Values: Believes in the importance of scientific exploration, the sanctity of life, and the power of human connection.
Character Dilemma: Torn between her duty as an astronaut and her instincts as a mother.

JON
A. The High Concept. During a space mission Jon is isolated with his pregnant girlfriend and must adapt to survive.
B. This character’s journey. Happy-go-lucky nerd to achiever
C. The Actor Attractors for this character. Dealing with disaster. Growing up. Becoming emotional and physical support for Suli in the eyes of the world. Oh, he may be a carpenter too…

Role in the Story: Protagonist
Age range: 26-36
Description: Mixed race,American
Core Traits: Dogged, determined
Motivation – Want: Freedom
Motivation – Need: Trust
Wound: Dumped at college
Likability: Humour, Inventiveness, Team player
Relatability: Fish out of water, Social actions, Pressure, personal doubts
Empathy: Moral issues with family background re birth in space – religion? Loss, Protective
Character Subtext: He is hiding his own doubts about being a capable father, especially in such an unprecedented situation.
Character Intrigue: He is working on a secret, makeshift plan to ensure their survival, which he hasn’t disclosed to Suli to avoid alarming her.
Flaw: His overprotectiveness can sometimes be stifling and lead to poor communication.
Values: Believes in family, the power of human ingenuity, and personal responsibility.
Character Dilemma: Struggles between his role as a protector and his need to trust Suli’s abilities and instincts.

HARRISON
A. The High Concept. The warring world stands to make millions for Harrison but the space catastrophe diverts the worlds attention towards hope.
B. This character’s journey. Two-faced mega manipulator to weakened and jailed
C. The Actor Attractors for this character. Global domination thwarted. Great range of emotions

Role in the Story: Antagonist
Age range: 26-36
Description: Mixed race, Asian/American
Core Traits: Dogged, determined
Motivation – Want: Power
Motivation – Need: Money
Wound:
Likability: Charisma, Competence
Relatability: Manipulating media. Ambition, Pragmatism
Empathy: Loss, Isolation, Regret in deeper emotional life
Character Subtext: He is hiding his involvement in the remote shuttle disaster to ensure it benefits his agenda.
Character Intrigue: His public persona as a concerned politician is a façade for his true motives of exploiting the disaster for personal gain.
Flaw: His hubris and overconfidence often lead him to underestimate others.
Values: Believes in power, control, and personal gain above all else.
Character Dilemma: Caught between maintaining his public image and executing his covert plans.

NANCY
A. The High Concept. For the best of reasons Nancy lets Suli go on the mission knowing she is pregnant and must justify this to the world.
B. This character’s journey. From a conspiring accomplice to the agony aunt for the world.
C. The Actor Attractors for this character. Warmth, emotion, justice.

Role in the Story: Unit Medic
Age range: 50’s
Description: Ethnic
Core Traits: Caring, conspiratorial, warm
Motivation – Want: To further the goals of mankind
Motivation – Need: To appease Harrison
Wound: Son works for Harrison
Likability: Compassion, Flaws, Dedication
Relatability: Hobbies, Social interactions
Empathy: Ethics, Emotional support, backstory?
Character Subtext: She is hiding the extent of her emotional pain and the toll it takes on her.
Character Intrigue: She secretly uses unconventional methods and knowledge from past traumatic experiences to help Suli, which she keeps from the higher-ups.
Flaw: Her tendency to overextend herself to avoid confronting her own pain.
Values: Believes in the sanctity of life, the importance of empathy, and the strength of the human spirit.
Character Dilemma: Torn between her professional duties and her personal quest for redemption and healing.

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Harry’s Character Profiles Part 1

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, so to make award-winning work and create a lifestyle which is confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: There cannot be too much bedrock! Really getting to know these characters inside out.

SULI
A. The High Concept. An accident on a space mission becomes the focus for the warring world when an astronaut’s pregnancy is revealed and rescue is impossible.
B. This character’s journey. From idealistic, quiet flippant girl to serious, responsible woman
C. The Actor Attractors for this character. Fun, great drama, first birth in space!

Role in the Story: Protagonist
Age range: 26-36
Description: Mixed race, Asian/American
Core Traits: Dogged, determined
Motivation – Want:
Motivation – Need:
Wound: Teen abortion
Likability: Altruism, Genuine, Resilient
Relatability: Moral challenge, Personal dreams
Empathy: Warmth, Physical challenge in the public eye.

JON
A. The High Concept. During a space mission Jon is isolated with his pregnant girlfriend and must adapt to survive.
B. This character’s journey. Happy-go-lucky nerd to achiever
C. The Actor Attractors for this character. Dealing with disaster. Growing up. Becoming emotional and physical support for Suli in the eyes of the world. Oh, he may be a carpenter too…

Role in the Story: Protagonist
Age range: 26-36
Description: Mixed race,American
Core Traits: Dogged, determined
Motivation – Want:
Motivation – Need:
Wound:
Likability: Humour, Inventiveness, Team player
Relatability: Fish out of water, Social actions, Pressure, personal doubts
Empathy: Moral issues with family background re birth in space – religion? Loss, Protective

HARRISON
A. The High Concept. The warring world stands to make millions for Harrison but the space catastrophe diverts the worlds attention towards hope.
B. This character’s journey. Two-faced mega manipulator to weakened and jailed
C. The Actor Attractors for this character. Global domination thwarted. Great range of emotions

Role in the Story: Antagonist
Age range: 26-36
Description: Mixed race, Asian/American
Core Traits: Dogged, determined
Motivation – Want:
Motivation – Need:
Wound:
Likability: Charisma, Competence
Relatability: Manipulating media. Ambition, Pragmatism
Empathy: Loss, Isolation, Regret in deeper emotional life

NANCY
A. The High Concept. For the best of reasons Nancy lets Suli go on the mission knowing she is pregnant and must justify this to the world.
B. This character’s journey. From a conspiring accomplice to the agony aunt for the world.
C. The Actor Attractors for this character. Warmth, emotion, justice.

Role in the Story: Unit Medic
Age range: 50’s
Description: Ethnic
Core Traits:
Motivation – Want:
Motivation – Need:
Wound:
Likability: Compassion, Flaws, Dedication
Relatability: Hobbies, Social interactions
Empathy: Ethics, Emotional support, backstory?

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Harry’s Likability/Relatability/Empathy

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, so to make award-winning work and create a lifestyle which is confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: That getting the bedrock down will make the character stronger, more complete, and easier to write!

Suli (Protagonist)
Likability – Altruism, genuine, resiliance
Relatability – Moral challenge re. sharing. Personal dreams,
Empathy – Warmth, In the public eye, Physical challenge

Jon (Boyfriend/Father)
Likability – Humour, Inventiveness, Team player
Relatability – Fish out of water, Social actions, Pressure, personal doubts
Empathy – Moral issues with family background re birth in space – religion? Loss, Protective

Harrison (Antagonist)
Likability – Charisma, Competence
Relatability – Manipulating media. Ambition, Pragmatism
Empathy – Loss, Isolation, Regret in deeper emotional life

Nancy (Unit Nurse)
Likability – Compassion, Flaws, Dedication
Relatability – Hobbies, Social interactions
Empathy – Ethics, Emotional support, backstory?

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Harry’s Character Intrigue

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: It

Character Name: SULI
Role: Protagonist
Hidden agendas: To get noticed
Competition: Everyone
Conspiracies: With Unit nurse to hide pregnancy
Secrets: Teenage abortion
Deception: Hiding pregnancy
Unspoken Wound: Second or third best
Secret Identity: A superstar singer (YouTube?)

Character Name: JON
Role: Boyfriend
Hidden agendas: To be noticed
Competition: Everyone
Conspiracies: Approached by Antagonist
Secrets: Teenage abortion
Deception: That he may be in league with politicians (son?)
Unspoken Wound: Excluded from will
Secret Identity: Famous engineer

Character Name: Harrison Sinclair
Role: Antagonist
Hidden agendas: To become President
Competition: Political
Conspiracies: With Jon? With space program. With pro-war coalition
Secrets: Fostering discontent
Deception: Jon is son? Illegitimate
Unspoken Wound: Loosing pregnant girlfriend.
Secret Identity: President

Character Name: Nancy Abduje
Role: Unit medical expert
Hidden agendas: To save Suli before mission
Competition: Jon
Conspiracies: Suli pregnancy
Secrets: Ex-abortion specialist
Deception: With NASA
Unspoken Wound: Couldn’t save woman (Jon’s Mum)
Secret Identity: Astronaut

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Harry’s Subtext Characters

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: It is great to work on subtext… my biggest weakness!

Movie reference:

Movie Title: Horrible Bosses
Character Name: Dr Julia Harris (Jennifer Aniston)
Subtext Identity: Horny manipulator in a powerful position
Subtext Trait: Taking advantage of every situation to proposition, and manipulating situations for the same
Subtext Logline: A woman manipulating her control over her employee for her own gratification.
Possible Areas of Subtext: Bath time, In the dentists chair, offering to treat his girlfriend.

My project: (GENESIS)

Character Name: SULI
Subtext Identity: A woman nursing her resentment at always coming third in the race
Subtext Trait: She puts herself down, even when she is winning.
Subtext Logline: A woman of immense resource who has never been allowed to shine
Possible Areas of Subtext: Training, winning Jon’s heart, invention during romance, resourcefulness in saving them in space, giving birth!

Character Name: JON
Subtext Identity: Naturally gifted engineer but socially awkward
Subtext Trait: Fidgets when challenged
Subtext Logline: Always first with an answer but unable to start a conversation
Possible Areas of Subtext: First meeting – has to be technical, as a metaphor for seduction. Rescuing Suli when he means himself.

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Harry’s Actor Attractors!

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: It’s great to begin to flesh out my characters.

Lead Character Name: SULI
Role: (Protagonist or Antagonist)
What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?
Ground-breaking role with great challenges for an actor.
What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?
She is the one who, potentially, is going to become the mother of the second coming!
What are the most interesting actions the Lead could take in the script?
Becoming the down-to-earth solutions finder. She has the responsibility for plant growth, and neutralises an infestation running rampant. When the disaster happens it is she who saves the two of them.
How can you introduce this role in a way that could sell it to an actor?
By starting with an extreme scene where she dominates the screen. This may be an underwater rescue in a training tank, or similar.
What could be this character’s emotional range?
A reckless personality it the first act, general chaos in the second and third, and mature in the fourth.
What subtext can the actor play?
She is the only person aboard who knows she is pregnant from the start of the mission.
What’s the most interesting relationships this character can have?
Jon, of course, but also the medic who diagnoses the pregnancy before the take off.
How will this character’s unique voice be presented?
She could be almost hypnotic in her speech.
What could make this character special and unique?
A mixed-race, unlikely heroine, who survives when thrown it at the deep end.

Lead Character Name: JON
Role: (Protagonist or Antagonist)
What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?
He is the foil to Suli’s practical nature.
What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?
As a father, he is totally unprepared. Researches the internet, but access is patchy.
What are the most interesting actions the Lead could take in the script?
Hiding, and losing, a condom in the love scene. Running around like a headless chicken when Suli goes into labour. “Wheres the hot water”?
How can you introduce this role in a way that could sell it to an actor?
He is going to go on an emotional journey to die for. Maybe he should be a carpenter in his spare time…
What could be this character’s emotional range
Cocky and trite to competent and funny
What subtext can the actor play?
He loves Suli deeply but doesn’t want that to be seen.
What’s the most interesting relationships this character can have?
Apart from with Suli, he might be tangled up in the politicians machinations?
How will this character’s unique voice be presented?
He employs ‘Dad Jokes’ at every turn. He is a quick-witted lampooner, along the lines of Jim Carey, which can get him into trouble.
What could make this character special and unique?
He is a bit of a child himself, but becomes the bedrock that humanity requires to stabilise the world.

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Harry’s Actor Attractors for Bruce Almighty

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: It is refreshing to go over actor tractors again. I got a lot out of this.

Movie Title: Bruce Almighty
Lead Character Name: Bruce Nolan (Jim Carey)

Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role?
Who wouldn’t want to play God?!

2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie?

Two massive transformations.
Firstly (superficial) from relative insignificance to the position of ultimate power.
Secondly (fundamental) from selfish egotist to caring husband.

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie?
Constantly going against the obvious, ie. ignoring signs! (Superior Position) and the Hobo (God)
The Butt Monkey confrontation – ‘playing God’.
His actions have consequences, such as moving the moon for romance causing devastating floods in parts of the world.

4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor?
A reporter who only reports on the cheesy stories rather than hard news. ie Buffalo’s Biggest Cookie with Chariots of Fire jokes.
We immediately learn that everything he wants he doesn’t’t get. ie. Sports team looses, Dog pees, Car jam etc. All packed into first 10 pages.

5. What is this character’s emotional range?
Naïve, Selfish, Jealous, desperate. Hurtful.
Ultimately acknowledging his strengths and caring about others and what really matters,

6. What subtext can the actor play?
His actions when in the role of God are NOT God-like!
Selfishness underlying every action.
He has to die to become aware of his actions, ie. Grace, when he dies!

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character has?
Grace (girlfriend)
Evan Backstabber Baxter
TV station boss
Hobo

8. How is this character’s unique voice presented?
OTT
Incredibly incisive, sharp wit.
Abjectly superior tone.

9. What makes this character special and unique?
He is given the chance that nobody else has ever had. (As far as we know…)

10. (Fill in a scene that shows the character fulfilling much of the Actor Attractor model.)
The montage scene when he assumes the power of God.
Music choice: ‘I’ve Got The Power’.
Actions he takes are all blatantly selfish. And yes, funny, because against type!

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Harry’s Genre Conventions

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: My AI assistant is working overtime. I’m getting great, mind-jogging feedback. Gonna have to think of a name to call it…!

Title: Genesis
Concept: Against a backdrop of worldwide civil unrest and climate danger, a couple consummate their love off planet at the International Launch Project. When disaster strikes, leaving them alone and isolated in space, they become the focus of the world’s attention as they deal with their biggest challenge yet: childbirth orbit.
Genre: Comedy, Drama

New Plan:

Act 1:
Opening: Introduce Suli and Jon in a hilariously awkward training scenario, where they're both struggling with zero-gravity maneuvers, but sparks fly between them nonetheless.
Inciting Incident: Their passionate love affair off-planet is filled with comedic mishaps, like navigating intimate moments in a cramped space or dealing with zero-gravity hijinks.
Turning Point: As they embark on their mission, their comedic banter and chemistry keep the audience engaged, setting the stage for the drama to come.
Act 2:
New Plan: Suli's reveal of her 4 month pregnancy leads to a series of comedic misunderstandings and attempts to hide the news from their colleagues, resulting in humorous situations.
Plan in Action: Their attempts to maintain normalcy while dealing with Suli's pregnancy onboard the ILP (International Launch Project) are rife with comedic moments, like trying to hide morning sickness or navigating weightlessness with a growing belly.
Midpoint Turning Point: The crash of the delivery drone shuttle becomes a darkly comedic moment, as they're left stranded and isolated in space, with the absurdity of their situation contrasting with the seriousness of their predicament.
Act 3:
Rethink Everything: Suli and Jon's existential crisis is punctuated by comedic moments of absurdity as they grapple with the reality of their situation, such as trying to change diapers in zero gravity or attempting to create makeshift baby supplies from space station equipment.
New Plan: Their comedic resilience shines through as they devise increasingly ridiculous plans to survive and return home, using their ingenuity to overcome obstacles in unexpected ways.
Turning Point: A comedic yet poignant moment of failure forces them to confront the gravity of their situation and reassess their priorities, leading to moments of vulnerability and introspection amidst the chaos.
Act 4: New Ways:
Climax/Ultimate Expression of the Conflict: Suli's comedic yet empowering childbirth in orbit becomes a symbol of hope and new beginnings, as they navigate the challenges of parenthood in space with humor and grace.
Resolution: Through their comedic and dramatic journey, Suli and Jon undergo a profound transformation, with Suli evolving from impulsive to thoughtful, embracing her role as a mother and leader with humor and heart. Their return home is met with a mix of laughter and tears, as they're celebrated for their resilience and courage in the face of absurdity and adversity.

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Harry’s 4 Act Transformational Structure

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, and sell award-winning work to create a lifestyle confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: That upgrading to ChatGPT 4.0 may well be the single most useful thing I’ve purchased in a while…

Act 1:
Opening: Introduce Suli and Jon as they fall in love during their training for the International Launch Project.
Inciting Incident: They consummate their love off-planet, setting the stage for their unique journey.
Turning Point: They embark on their mission aboard the new ISS, full of hope and excitement.
Act 2:
New Plan: Suli discovers she's pregnant, throwing their mission and their lives into turmoil.
Plan in Action: They struggle to keep Suli’s pregnancy a secret while continuing their duties aboard the ISS.
Midpoint Turning Point: The delivery drone shuttle crashes, leaving them stranded and isolated in space, with the world's attention now focused on them.
Act 3:
Rethink Everything: Suli and Jon must rethink their entire situation and their plans for the future in light of the unexpected turn of events.
New Plan: They devise a plan to survive and eventually return home, facing numerous challenges along the way.
Turning Point: Huge Failure/Major Shift: Despite their efforts, they encounter a major setback or failure that forces them to confront their limitations and reassess their priorities.
Act 4: New Ways:
Climax/Ultimate Expression of the Conflict: Suli gives birth to their baby boy in the midst of the chaos, symbolizing hope and new beginnings.
Resolution: Through their experiences in space and the challenges of parenthood, Suli and Jon undergo a profound transformation. Suli evolves from being impulsive and risk-taking to being cautious and forward-thinking, embracing her role as a mother and leader. They find a way to overcome their obstacles and return home, where they are now revered and respected for their resilience and courage.

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My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, so to make award-winning work and create a lifestyle which is confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: How locating a subtext plot will elevate the whole intrigue and give the audience layers to follow. I can see how in my case those layers will be many-fold.

Title: Genesis
Concept:: Against a backdrop of worldwide civil unrest and climate danger, a couple consummate their love off planet at the International Launch Project. When disaster strikes, leaving them alone and isolated in space, they pacify the conflicts as they deal with their biggest challenge yet: childbirth orbit with the whole world watching.

Choice of Subtext Plots:
The Fish out of Water: Suli, accustomed to the controlled environment of the space program, finds herself completely out of her element when disaster strikes, leaving her stranded in space with Jon. As they struggle to survive, Suli must rely on her instincts and resourcefulness to navigate the unfamiliar territory of parenthood in zero gravity.
Superior Position: Throughout the mission, the audience is privy to information that Suli and Jon are unaware of, including Harrison's nefarious plans to sabotage the launch. As Suli and Jon face one challenge after another, the audience is kept on the edge of their seats, rooting for the protagonists to overcome the obstacles in their path.
A Major Cover-Up: Behind the scenes of the International Launch Project, Harrison orchestrates a major cover-up to conceal the truth about the mission's failure. As Suli and Jon race against time to unravel the mystery, they uncover evidence of Harrison's deception and must decide whether to expose the truth or protect the reputation of the space program.

Notes on how I will use these:
I can see that Fish out of Water is an obvious one. Nobody has experienced what Suli is going to go through! Well, maybe in ancient times there will have been some having childbirth unaided in caves or some other isolation, but not in zero gravity!
I can also see that a major subplot option can be what is transpiring on Earth whilst they are contending with the challenges of space. So Superior Position and A Major Coverup can come into play as the script progresses, adding story background layers to the plot.

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Harry’s Transformational Journey (for my Protagonist).

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, so to make award-winning work and create a lifestyle which is confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: It is really essential to set the template before writing a character.

Arc Begins: Suli starts as an ambitious and somewhat naïve astronaut, eager to prove herself and make a mark in the space program. She takes risks without fully considering the consequences, prioritizing the present moment over long-term planning.
Arc Ends: By the end of the story, Suli has undergone a profound transformation. She emerges as a responsible and practical leader, inspiring others with her resilience and determination. Through her experiences, she learns the importance of thinking ahead and taking calculated risks for the greater good.

Internal Journey: Suli’s internal journey involves a shift from feeling overlooked and underrated to being revered and respected. Initially, she struggles with self-doubt and a fear of failure, but as she faces challenges in space and confronts her own limitations, she gains confidence in her abilities and earns the admiration of her peers.
External Journey: Suli’s external journey is marked by her evolution from a minor character included for racial diversity to a unifying force across all ethnicities. As she navigates the dangers of space and grapples with the unexpected pregnancy, Suli becomes a symbol of hope and resilience, bridging divides and bringing people together in the face of adversity.

Old Ways: Suli’s old ways are characterized by her tendency to take risks and live in the present moment. She is ambitious and driven, but her impulsive nature sometimes leads her to make hasty decisions without considering the potential consequences.
New Ways: By the end of the story, Suli adopts a more careful and forward-thinking approach. She learns to weigh the risks and benefits of her actions, taking into account the long-term implications for herself and others. Her experiences in space and the challenges of motherhood shape her into a mature and responsible leader, inspiring those around her with her wisdom and compassion.

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Harry’s Intentional Lead Characters

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, so to make award-winning work and create a lifestyle which is confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is:
Start with the absolute basics. A great foundation makes the rest of the building strong!

Character: Suli Chen (Protagonist)
Logline: A driven technician, deeply in love with Jon, is thrown into confusion by her pregnancy and situation.
Unique: She has a special assignment to complete.

Character: Harrison Sinclair (Antagonist)
Logline: A charismatic politician with a thirst for power and very little in the way of a moral compass.
Unique: He has a life-terminating disease and wants to accomplish world domination as his legacy.

Character: Dr. Jamal Khan (Triangle Character)
Logline: The Space mission’s medical officer who also cares for the antagonist
Unique: He knows the secret of both parties.

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Harry’s Title, Concept and Character Structure!

My vision for success from this program is:
To create scripts freely when working with producers, directors and cast, so to make award-winning work and create a lifestyle which is confident of financial freedom.

What I learned from doing this assignment is: Sometimes AI reinforces prior decisions, such as titles. But wow, what a brainstorming partner AI is!

Title: Genesis
Concept: Against a backdrop of worldwide civil unrest and climate danger, a couple consummate their love off planet at the International Launch Project. When disaster strikes, leaving them alone and isolated in space, they become the focus of the world’s attention as they deal with their biggest challenge yet: childbirth orbit.

Character Structure: Rom-Com. This will be comedic drama.

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Harry’s Hero and Villain

What I learned doing this assignment is… Getting a good overview of the Protag. and Antag. is essential but here I learned that these can grow and change to fit the plot demands.

Concept:

Hero Morally Right: An innocent tangled up with forces beyond his comprehension <div>

Villain Morally Wrong: Destroyer of people and worlds

Hero

A. Unique Skill Set: Maybe: Junior olympic Taekwando contender </div><div>

NEW: Learns Krav Maga from girl

B. Motivation: Love of girl;

NEW: concern for environment

C. Secret or Wound: Missing out on Olympics

NEW: Professor un-belief

Villain

A. Unbeatable: Many vicious thugs and escalating international help
NEW: Add local mafia-style gang at port? <div>

B. Plan/Goal: To badly wound the US

NEW: Property deal? Local drug trade? people trafficking?

C. What they lose if Hero survives: Mission fail / capture

NEW: Death

Impossible Mission

A. Puts Hero in Action: Abduction of girlfriend </div>

NEW: Discovery of pollution

B. Demands They Go Beyond Their Best: Escalating Obstacles

C. Destroy the Villain: Expose to US forces?

NEW: Personally take down villain.

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Harry’s Concept

What I learned doing this assignment is… It is so great to start with an embryo idea. Developing via the conventions will keep me on track rather than wasting effort going doing down rabbit holes!

Concept: A Masters student doing research on La Palma uncovers a plot to hold the USA to ransom.

Conventions:

Hero: Tom – Geophysics student. A beanpole with a brain who expects a cushy ride and gets tangled up in a rescue gone wrong.

Demand For Action: Girlfriend abducted

Mission: a) Rescue girl; b) Uncover mystery; c) Foil plot

Antagonist: Ringmaster of alternative circus. Middle East ancestry

Escalating Action: Bar brawl to gang to terrorists

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Hi, I’m Harry Rankin. Great to meet you all here!

I’ve written quite a few scripts and have one under option right now 😀. I’m a graduate of MSC14 amongst many other ScrU classes. All excellent.

I’m hoping to raise my ‘action’ game with this class. Many of my scripts fall into too many genre categories so bringing strategic focus is my aim here. However I don’y have a great high concept as yet so I may take my time posting here…

Something strange? I live on a boat on the Thames in London. Not so unusual though; following in the footsteps of Simon Beaufoy and Richard Branson! I hope I can live up to them!

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Harry Rankin

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I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.

3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.

4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.

5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.

6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.

This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

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Harry’s Lesson 4 Work

What I learned doing this assignment is: That my scenes require more of this… it is going to be fun to rewrite this script – even if it’s going to be a total re-write and lots of work!

Promotion at work:

Unaware, sabotage. The boss is eulogising about the selection of a new partner. Jon assumes it will be him as does everyone else. A female colleague is jealous and tells Klaudia that it is just nepotism. However it is Klaudia who is promoted. The subtext is that she doesn’t feel worthy even though her hard work has earned it, and he feels let down and not ‘good enough’ once more. This puts a strain on their relationship. The colleague secretly wants an affair with Klaudia and is trying to undermine their relationship .

After the accident:

Misinterpretation, deception. Jon is confident they can find a way out. Klaudia demands to know exactly how they will achieve this and what his training calls for in this situation. He has to admit that he has very little training. The subtext is that he is ‘flying by the seat of his pants’ to impress and loosen her up. Now he has to really work to both save them and to show that he has future plans to solve her base issues.

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Harry’s Lesson 3 WORK

What I learned doing this assignment is: Although I had considered these traits before, I had not actually contrasted them with subtext. This is a great character development tool to learn!

Jon:

Character surface:, Spontaneous, impetuous, charming, easy-going.

Character Subtext: Appears over-confident but his subtext is wounded – untrusted by father as a kid, having to prove himself at every turn. Mother over-compensated and cleaned up after him. He craves approval.

How his character shows up: Messy and expects others to clean up/finish up for him. Reliant on and deferential to others but knows what he wants, just can’t force it. His spontaneity borders rashness. Often unprepared, relying on natural ability and charm.

Klaudia:

Character surface: Neat, deliberate, fastidious, workaholic, planner

Character Subtext: Mother died and father working all hours so had to care for her brother and couldn’t save him. Feels the need to over-care and control. Her balance is off.

How her character shows up: Control-freak. Her way is the only way. Not a team player but rises due to extraordinary diligence. Under the surface she wants to be cared for; to be taken care of and not to have to control every last detail. She has to learn to let others take command.

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Harry’s Lesson 2 Work

What I learned doing this assignment is: Thinking about the environment in terms of subtext helps to give the script rock-solid foundations. Not just a setting but a reflection of the conflicts in the characters lives.

Environments:

Rockface. On the surface it is a challenge and one that they can master. However the subtext is that it is hard work and they must take care of each other to survive.

Home. Where different lifestyles conflict. Tidiness vs mess. Order vs chaos. Care vs neglect. The subtext being the primary motivations of our pair.

Workplace. Open plan but with concealable rooms. Subtext is that what is on the surface obscures what is being hidden underneath.

Beach. An open environment where all is equal. Subtext is that there is no place to hide.

Two main subtext Environments:

A: Rockface : One slip can be fatal. Competition does not win the day. When disaster is faced the only way to survive is to forget the past and work together. Environmental changes add weight to their individual predicaments. Physical challenges become metaphors for their issues.

B: Workplace : Where competition rules. Subverting the opposition is grist to the mill. On the surface civility and order rule, but the subtext is winning at all costs. Ostensibly a loving couple, these two are actually at war. Cases they work on create conflicts that underpin their differences – and their similarities, if they choose to see them.

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Harry’s Subtext Mastery Lesson 1

What I learned doing this assignment is: It helps to clarify the intentions of the plot by understanding the subtext which underpins it.

Surface: Spontaneous and rash JON leads this warring couple into extreme sport…

Major Twist: …where a major accident traps them…

Deeper Meaning: …and forces them to work together regaining their trust in each other.

Plot Subtext:

The couple start out with Jon leading the expedition and Klaudia reluctantly following. The subtext is that she has been wearing the trousers in the relationship and he is seeking to gain control. Is this just an exercise or is he attempting to regain an equilibrium?

When the accident occurs she seeks to dominate but believes he may know more about how to survive in this instance. But he admits that he knows very little after all.

As their jeopardy increases with situational changes he concedes that she may have some points to offer.

But when push comes to shove she has no choice but to follow him in an extremely risky venture, where she has been proved right in the past.

As they survive this the realisation dawns that they actually do work well as a team and that both have more to offer than they thought. They have broken the endless loop of recrimination and can see what attracted them in the first place.

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Great concept! I love a good pirate movie and creating a vehicle for older actors will be very appealing in Hollywood.