Ben Ather
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Ben’s Visually Appealing Bible
What I learned doing this assignment is
I have decided to leave my TV Pitch Bible without pictures. This is because I can’t find pictures that match the vision of my story.
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Subject line: Ben’s Edited TV Pitch Bible
What I learned doing this assignment is
After I read through my TV Pitch Bible, I found that I need to fix many things. It is funny that I spent too much time trying to make my first draft perfect, only to find out that it was not close enough. Next thing to do is to get feedback from another person. A second eye will find problems I could not or believed that they were fine.
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Subject line: Ben’s Presents Non-Stop Intrigue
What I learned doing this assignment is
I have done most of this while doing previous assignment, but I also realized not every line will have intriguing patterns. Maybe it is because I can’t come up with any at the moment. So I will leave them for future improvement.
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Subject Line: (Your name’s) 10 Most Interesting Things
What I learned doing this assignment is
It forced me to find interesting things in my story, which I have never thought of, or knew they were there.
ASSIGNMENT:
TEN MOST INTERESTING THINGS IN MY STORY
– Nora’s father abandoned her because she is too ugly to learn magic and bring honor to the family.
– There is a rule that magic is taught only to the pretty ones.
– Breaking the rule means execution without trial.
– An ugly beggar girl must venture into dangerous world.
– A disguise that requires one’s life force to retain its nature.
– Nora uses losing her life while trying to find her own way to get into the Affinity Academy to threaten her adopted father into helping her.
– Wearing the disguise for too long will lead to Nora’s demise.
– Nora goes ahead with the disguise knowing that it will kill her.
– Nora’s adopted father is the head of the Affinity Academy.
– Mani conned Nora and informed authorities about her plan to break the rule.
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Subject Line: Ben’s Producer/Manager
What I learned today is
I have learned what producer and manager want, but it is difficult how to present myself to the manager. Especially when I don’t know how to fulfill the other requirements. The only way I can think of is to listen and answer their questions after I have presented my project and presenting another marketable project. Anyway, I will leave that for future lessons. Maybe I will learn something.
ASSIGNMENT
Imagine you have two meetings set up — with a producer and then with a manager. What would you say and do differently based upon this model?
Answer two questions:
1. How will you present yourself and your project to the producer?
– I would start with telling them the genre of my project, which fits their specific market. Then present two Marketable Component (A. Unique and G. Wide Audience Appeal) from lesson 2. And listen to answer their questions.
2. How will you present yourself and your project to the manager?
– I would start with a title, concept, and present another marketable project if I have any. And listen to answer their questions.
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Subject Line: Ben’s Marketable Components
<i style=””>What I learned doing this assignment is
I now know what will sell a script. Before this lesson, I have not thought whether my script will sell or not, which puts me in a disadvantage position. It will not be the same for my future scripts because I know that they will sell.
ASSIGNMENT
Pick one or two components and tell us how your script already fulfills them AND how you might highlight these two in order to elevate the pitch.
1. Tell us your current logline.
CONCEPT: An ugly beggar girl decides to learn magic and prove her father wrong, but magic is taught only to the pretty ones.
2. Look through the 10 Components of Marketability and pick one or two that have the most potential for selling this script.
MY PICKS
A. Unique: The concept about teaching magic only to the pretty ones hasn’t been explored before.
G. Wide audience appeal: Lead character is 15-yr-old. Other main and support characters are teens.
3. Do a quick brainstorm session about ways to elevate those two components for this script and tell us how you might pitch the script through the two components.
– Underworld of Magic is about an ugly 15-yr-old beggar girl who finds out her father abandoned her because she is too ugly to learn magic and bring honour to the family. She decides to learn magic and prove her father wrong, but there is the rule that magic is taught only to the pretty ones and anyone who breaks it is executed without trial.
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Title: Ben’s Project and Market
What I learned today is
My intention when I signed up for this class is to learn how to pitch. Now I see there is more to learn.
ASSIGNMENT
1. Give us your Genre, Title, and Concept.
Genre: Fantasy
Title: Underworld of Magic
Concept: An ugly beggar girl decides to learn magic and prove her father wrong, but magic
is taught only to the pretty ones.
2. In one or two sentences, tell us what you think is most attractive about your story.
– Concept is the only thing I can think of at the moment as the most attractive about my story. There are movies having to do with magic out there, but none have to do with teaching magic to certain people.
3. Tell us which you will target FIRST — managers, producers, or actor’s production company — and why you picked that target.
FIRST TARGET: PRODUCERS
– This is totally based on what I have learned in this lesson. I know nothing about managers and actor’s production company, which will decrease my success rate. So, I’m using the knowledge of what I have learned to pick the target I’m very confident I will succeed.
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Ben Ather – I agree to the terms of this release form.
GROUP RELEASE FORM
As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.
This completes the Group Release Form for the class.
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Hi all,
I’m Ben Ather. I have written 8 scripts and hope to learn how to pitch in this class.
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Subject line: Ben’s Beat Sheet
What I learned doing this assignment is
I need to learn to come up with short descriptions for A, B, and C story. There is still a lot I need to learn in writing Beat Sheet.
ASSIGNMENT
1. Tell us your Show Concept and Inciting Incident.
Concept: An ugly beggar decides to learn magic and prove her birth father wrong, but magic
is taught only to the pretty ones.
Inciting Incident: Nora’s adopted father, Old Beggar, finds her birth father, and she discovers that he abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family. Nora decides to learn magic and prove her birth father wrong.
2. List your A, B, and C Stories.
A Story: Nora wants to get into the Affinity Academy.
B Story: Array is exposed and must find a way to get out of the Affinity Academy.
C Story: Reed isn’t interested in learning magic and Mo must do his duty.
3. Present your current Beat Sheet with no dialogue.
BEAT SHEET
TEASER
EXT. SKY – DAY
Clear sky. Suddenly the sky starts to shake. Then a small crack appears, turning into a tear across the sky.
EXT. ANOTHER AREA, SKY – DAY
Terra, Shard, and three men ride flying creatures. All in a rush. Terra is leading them.
EXT. SKY – DAY
The tear turns into a rift. Light spills out.
EXT. DESERT – DAY
It is calm, but a strange wind begins to pick up, getting stronger and stronger. Suddenly the plants are yank off the ground. The next thing happening, earth is torn from its place, everything is flying up.
EXT. SKY – DAY
The rift has expanded, showing its red and infused with lightening inside. A strong wind flows in. It’s sucking something — the earth.
EXT. SKY – MOMENTS LATER
Terra, Shard, and three men push through the debris. Their bodies shrouded in light and flying toward the rift.
EXT. RIFT – DAY
The five men send streams of light into the rift, forming a seal over it. The seal holds briefly and breaks. They send streams, forming another seal. Same thing happens. Terra, Shard, and three men start to show signs of exhaustion. Terra nods to the three men. They chant a spell, and light shoots out of their bodies. They turn into three balls of light, merge, and fly into the rift.
EXT. RIFT – CONITUES
An explosion comes from inside the rift, sending out a shock wave that destroys everything. The rift stops sucking, and giant bone-like chains appear from within the rift and zips it up.
Turning Point: Terra and four sorcerers stopped the rift from wreaking havoc, but it’s still there, held together by giant chains.
ACT 1:
EXT. RYSTER CITY – DAY
A ring-like city built from nicely polished stones.
EXT. MARKET – DAY
Two average looking teenagers leave one stall and head for grocery man’s stall. Along their path, they see a very ugly beggar girl on the ground with her begging bowl. They run away when they recognize the beggar is Nora the cursed girl.
EXT. GROCERY STALL – DAY
Grocery man sees that and throws rotten vegetables and fruits at Nora to make her go away. He blames Nora that her present is the reason he hasn’t had a single customer all day and wants her to spread her curse somewhere else.
EXT. ANOTHER AREA – DAY
Parents are out shopping with their children. These children, 10 – 17, have one thing in common. They are all very pretty, and their parents buy them whatever they want.
EXT. MARKET – DAY
Nora is moving down the market, avoiding everyone and trying to get out of here. Children, 5 – 7, begin to follow her while throwing rocks at her. Nora screams at them to stop and ends up frightening them. A woman strikes Nora and tells her off for scaring their children.
EXT. ANOTHER AREA – DAY
Nora is keeping her distance. Ginn, 15, asks her mother why everyone thinks Nora is cursed and if it is the reason why she was abandoned. Ginn’s mother thinks it is because Nora is too ugly and she caused her mother’s death in childbirth.
EXT. BACK ALLEY, TAVERN – DAY
Nora is starving. She searches the dumpster for food and finds nothing. A tavern worker steps into the alley with leftover food and gives it to the dog.
EXT. BEGGAR TOWN – NIGHT
Part of Ryster city in ruins.
INT. SHELTER – NIGHT
Nora’s adopted beggar sister, Anna, blames Nora that their adopted father has neglected her and wants Nora to leave the city. Nora refuses, and Anna calls her boys to threaten Nora, forcing her to leave.
EXT. BEGGAR TOWN – NIGHT
Nora tries to find a place to sleep. The beggars, even ugly ones, are afraid of Nora spreading her curse to them and chase her away.
EXT. STREET – NIGHT
Nora tries to talk sense into Anna’s boys who are following her to make sure that she leaves the city. They threaten to beat her instead.
INT. SHELTER – DAY
Nora and Anna’s adopted father, Old Beggar, interrogates Anna and her boys to find out what they have done to Nora. They lie, but Old Beggar knows that Anna is behind it. He chases them out of the Beggar town and warns them of the consequences if he ever sees them again.
EXT. OUTSIDE THE CITY WALLS – DAY
Old Beggar tells Nora he’s found her birth father, but Nora is afraid she might find out what people are saying about her abandonment, being cursed, and causing her mother’s death in childbirth to be true and refuses. Old Beggar reminds her why she wanted to find her father, and she agrees to see him.
EXT. COURTYARD, EUCHER’S HOUSE – DAY
Nora confronts her birth father, Eucher, to find out the truth and discovers he abandoned her because she is ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family.
Turning Point: Nora discovers her birth father, Eucher, abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family. Turns out magic is taught to pretty ones.
Act 2:
EXT. AFFINITY ACADEMY, MYSTIC MOUNTAIN – DAY
Like Ryster city, it’s built from nicely polished stones.
INT. CLASS – DAY
Sparrow agents rush in, seize the students and out with them without care even to the teacher.
INT. GREAT HALL OF SKAI RUSE – DAY
Sparrow agents gather the students in the hall and lock the door. The students demand to know what is happening, and Mo threatens to expel them and makes sure that they will never be accepted into any school. Then he orders Sparrow agents to inspect students’ faces. They find nothing, and Mo allows the students to return to classes.
INT. GREAT HALL OF SKAI RUSE – LATER
Teachers are worried that if words of what happened gets out, it will not only ruin their reputation but also school’s. To ease their worries, Mo tells them that the school is in lockdown and Array will be arrested.
INT. SHELTER, BEGGAR TOWN – DAY
Nora lies in bed, silently crying. The door is bolted. Only her in the vast room.
EXT. SHELTER – DAY
Old Beggar tries to make Nora open the door. Nora does not, and he tries everything he can to make her feel better. Nothing works.
INT. GREAT HALL OF SKAI RUSE, AFFINITY ACADEMY – DAY
Zin tells Mo the story of the king and his two best friends, warning him that he knows about his scheme with teachers to take over Terra’s position. Mo denies it.
EXT. WOODS – DAY
Array is running from something or someone but runs into a Sparrow agent waiting for him. Sparrow agent tells Array to give up and come with him. Array attacks him instead, and Sparrow agent sends out a signal in the form of a sparrow.
INT. GREAT HALL OF SKAI RUSE – DAY
Mo orders Natchez to find and arrest Array before upcoming event in three days. Natchez is worried that Mystic Mountain is too big to find Array in a short time. A sparrow flies in and transforms into Sparrow agent who intercepted Array and requests for reinforcements.
EXT. WOODS – DAY
Array beats Sparrow agent and escapes before Natchez arrives with reinforcements. Natchez asks Sparrow agent the direction Array ran to. Sparrow agent points them, and Natchez orders the other agents to pursue. Then he helps Sparrow agent to his feet and both chase after Array.
EXT. O’LLER AND ALOE’S HOUSE, RYSTER CITY – DAY
Toto, 17, asks Aloe, 16, and Reed, 15, if they are excited about the upcoming recruitment in three days. Aloe is excited to join Affinity Academy and learn magic, but Reed isn’t interested and wants to become someone else. Aloe reminds him that it is not up to him but his father. That troubles Reed.
INT. DUNE’S HOUSE – DAY
Reed’s mother, Lynn, tells Reed his father can’t make it back to take him to the Affinity Academy and wants him to go with Aloe and Toto.
EXT. SHELTER, BEGGAR TOWN – DAY
Nora opens the door to let in Old Beggar. She asks him why magic is so important, and if it is why is there a ridiculous rule of teaching magic only to the pretty ones. Old Beggar tells her all he knows is that the founder of the Affinity Academy, Skai Ruse, introduced it 800 years ago in the Affinity Academy, but nobody knows why.
EXT. PORTAL GATE, AFFINITY ACADEMY – DAY
Array watches from behind a tree. A spell shrouds the gate and Sparrow agents tightly guard the place. Natchez comes and orders Sparrow agents to sweep surrounding areas. Array leaves.
INT. SUPPLY BUILDING – DAY
Array slips into the room through the window and conjures a fire to torch the supplies. The fire spreads and blocks his way out. He goes through the door and the guards are right there.
INT. GREAT HALL OF SKAI RUSE – DAY
The man in charge of supplies reports to Mo that all their reserved supplies are gone and the guards dead. What is left of supplies will not last a day and requests Mo to allow him to get supplies. Mo grants it.
INT. RESTROOM – DAY
Jitt rushes into the room and undoes his pants. Array grabs him from behind, but he slips from his grasp and trips toward the door, calling for help. Array knocks him out cold.
INT. SHELTER, BEGGAR TOWN – DAY
Nora asks Old Beggar why no one has tried to change the rule. Old Beggar believes that people are afraid or have grown to accept it. Old Beggar becomes suspicious that Nora is up to something.
INT. O’LLER AND ALOE’S HOUSE – DAY
O’ller is worried that Aloe is becoming too close to her friends and will forget her mission for going to the Affinity Academy. Aloe tells her that it is all part of her cover.
INT. SHELTER – DAY
Old Beggar questions Nora what she is up to. She tells him her decision to learn magic and wants his help to get into the Affinity Academy.
Turning Point/Midpoint: Nora tells Old Beggar her decision to learn magic to prove Eucher wrong and wants his help to get into the Affinity Academy.
Act 3:
INT. SHELTER – DAY
Old Beggar reminds Nora of the rule and getting executed for breaking it to change her mind. Nora uses her birth father’s reason for abandoning her and wanting to prove him wrong to convince him. Old Beggar refuses to send her to her death no matter her reason, angering her.
INT. ARRAY’S HIDEOUT, AFFINITY ACADEMY – DAY
Array tries get info from Jitt what Affinity Academy is planning to do about the supplies. Jitt lies that he is just a student and knows nothing. Array tortures Jitt into telling him everything and discovers that his plan to use supplies run to escape has failed.
INT. ARRAY’S HIDEOUT – LATER
Jitt tries to break the spell holding him. Array comes in and almost catches him in the act. He attempts to distract Array but ends up hitting his wound Array almost kills him.
EXT. MAIN STREET, RYSTER CITY – DAY
The two average looking teenagers who ran away from Nora in the market whispers about a man who can get anyone into any school and how it is a god’s given chance for them to gain respect they deserve. Nora tries to get info from them but scares them away.
EXT. MARKET – DAY
One of the average looking teenagers buys meat from the butcher. He sees Nora watching him and runs but trips and falls. He blames Nora. Nora tells him she will follow him wherever he goes. Scared, he tells Nora the man’s name and where to find him.
INT. ARRAY’S HIDEOUT, AFFINITY ACADEMY – DAY
Jitt is alone. No Array. He casts a spell, breaks the restrain and bolts out of here.
EXT. ARRAY’S HIDEOUT – DAY
Jitt finds Array at the entrance of the cave, distracted. He uses the opportunity to knock him down with a ball of light and runs for it.
EXT. WOODS – DAY
Jitt is running. Not wasting a moment for Array to catch up with him.
EXT. ANOTHER AREA, WOODS – DAY
Natchez is leading Sparrow agents and heading in the same direction Jitt is running from.
EXT. WOODS – DAY
Jitt sees Natchez and tries to call out. Array covers his mouth and drags him in the bushes. Jitt struggles to get out of Array’s grasp, almost alerting Natchez and Sparrow agents passing. Array knocks him out.
INT. ARRAY’S HIDEOUT – DAY
Array drags unconscious Jitt in and casts a spell to restrain him. He looks at Jitt’s face and his eyes light up. He has a crazy idea.
EXT. O’LLER AND ALOE’S HOUSE, RYSTER CITY – DAY
Reed tells Aloe about his father wanting him to get into the Affinity Academy with her and Toto. Then he asks her what to do knowing his father will not allow him to follow his dream. Aloe suggests he asks his mother to talk to his father, believing she may have a way to convince him.
EXT. DUNE’S HOUSE – DAY
Reed tells Lynn about not being interested in learning magic and begs her to promise to talk to his father. Lynn reluctantly promises.
EXT. OLD DOCK – DAY
Mani takes money from the average and ugly looking children and tells them to meet here in two days. Nora asks Mani if he can get her into the Affinity Academy. Mani thinks it is difficult but not impossible. Then he charges Nora 50 Shais, and she has two days to get the money.
INT. TAVERN – DAY
Nora asks the owner for work. He laughs and tells everyone about it. They all laugh before the owner instructs his men to throw her out. The men throw her out.
EXT. GROCERY STALL, MARKET – DAY
Nora asks grocery man if he is looking for someone to run a few errands for him. Grocery man is shocked at first before bursting into laughter. Then he mocks her, and she steals his money bag.
EXT. MARKET – DAY
Grocery man chases Nora down the market. Nora is too fast that she out runs him in a short time.
EXT. ALLEYWAY – DAY
Nora walks in and checks the content of the bag. Grocery man and the people helping him surround her. They badly beat her before grocery man drags her out.
EXT. FRONT GATE, AUTHORITIES BUILDING – DAY
Grocery man drags Nora in front of the guards and demands they lock her up. The guards laugh and wave him away with the people. Grocery man beats Nora again before leaving.
EXT. FRONT GATE – LATER
Concerned, Old Beggar runs up to Nora curled up on the ground and tries to help her. Nora pushes him away and passes out.
INT. SHELTER – DAY
Nora is shaking and sweating. She has a fever. Old Beggar calls a young beggar to watch over her.
EXT. DOCTOR’S HOUSE – DAY
Old Beggar follows the doctor around as he examines the patients with strange disease. He begs the doctor to see Nora. The doctor believes his patients are more important than a beggar and wants him to leave. Old Beggar offers to work for him for free. The doctor tells him to leave or someone will make him.
EXT. OLD DOCK – DAY
Old Beggar threatens to expose Mani who turns out to be a con man. Mani offers Old Beggar money to shut him up, but he demands Mani gives him all the money he conned from the children.
INT. SHELTER – DAY
Old Beggar asks the doctor about Nora’s condition. The doctor tells him she has multiple broken ribs and internal bleeding. She would have died if he hasn’t looked for him.
EXT. COURTYARD, AFFINITY ACADEMY – DAY
The man in charge checks the supply run team to make sure everyone is present. He finds Jitt missing and asks others who know nothing. Jitt shows up fixing his pants and tells the man in charge he’s been stuck in the toilet. Everyone covers their nose because he stinks.
EXT. PORTAL GATE – DAY
The man in charge leads supply run team toward the gate. Just when Jitt gets close, he sets off wards and gets trapped in a spell. Turns out he is Array disguised as Jitt and supply run is a trap. The man in charge turns into Natchez and arrests him.
INT. GREAT HALL OF SKAI RUSE – DAY
Sparrow agents leave Jitt’s dead body next to bound Array. Mo casts a spell that turns Jitt’s dead body into its true form — a wood. Jitt’s face Array is wearing dissolves into nothingness, revealing his real and hideous face. Mo orders Natchez to execute Array.
Turning Point: Array turns out to be an ugly young man disguised as a pretty one to learn magic.
Act 4:
INT. SHELTER, BEGGAR TOWN – DAY
Old Beggar watches over Nora as she sleeps. She wakes up and asks Old Beggar again to help her. He refuses, and she uses the condition she is in and the possibility of losing her life while finding her own way to threaten him. Old Beggar agrees to help her.
INT. GREAT HALL OF SKAI RUSE, AFFINITY ACADEMY – DAY
Mo tells teachers about scrutinizing the children in the upcoming recruitment and doing thorough background investigation every now and then to make sure what happened never happens. Zin reminds Mo that he is the head of the Sparrow Agency and cannot make that kind of decision. Only Terra, the head of the school, can.
INT. GREAT HALL OF SKAI RUSE – LATER
Lynn tells Mo about Reed not being interested in learning magic and tries to convince him to let Reed follow his dream, but Mo threatens to disown Reed or worse if he breaks their family value.
INT. SHELTER, BEGGAR TOWN – DAY
Old Beggar asks Nora if she is willing to do whatever it takes to learn magic. Nora is confident that nothing can stop her. He hopes that is the case.
INT. SHELTER, BEGGAR TOWN – LATER
Authorities barge in and roughly grab Nora. Authority man tells her she is being arrested for planning to break the rule to learn magic.
INT. CELL, AUTHORITIES BUILDING – DAY
Guards torture Nora. Mani is with Authority man in guard’s uniform and loving what he sees. Authority man explains to him that he has informed Affinity Academy and Sparrow agents are on their way.
INT. OFFICE, AUTHORITIES BUILDING – DAY
Terra wants Authority man to release Nora into his custody, but Authority man is suspicious of why the head of the Affinity Academy is doing his agents’ duty. Terra uses his status to threaten him into handing over Nora.
INT. GREAT HALL OF SKAI RUSE, AFFINITY ACADEMY – DAY
Kins is worried that Zin is more than suspicious of their scheme with teachers to take over Terra’s position. He will find evidences to expose them if they don’t do something about it. Mo tells Kins the time isn’t right.
EXT. MAIN ROAD, OUTSIDE THE CITY – DAY
Terra releases Nora and tells her to forget wanting to learn magic, but if she continues with her plan, he will execute her himself.
EXT. OUTSIDE THE CITY WALLS – DAY
Old Beggar finds Nora by the wall. She tells him about Terra’s warning and that she is determined to get into the Affinity Academy no matter the cost.
EXT. STRANGE SORCERER’S HOUSE – DAY
Old Beggar tells strange sorcerer he needs his help to make Nora his special disguise. Strange sorcerer is worried putting her through the process in her condition is risky. She has to wait until she is better, unintentionally angering Nora.
INT. KITCHEN, DUNE’S HOUSE, RYSTER CITY – DAY
Reed asks Lynn if she had a talk with his father. Lynn tells him she needs time, but Reed believes that she is afraid and is disappointed in his mother for making a promise she can’t keep.
EXT. STRANGE SORCERER’S HOUSE – DAY
Strange sorcerer asks Old Beggar if he explained everything to Nora about the disguise. Old Beggar believes that she needs to find it out from him and hopes she will change her mind.
EXT. O’LLER AND ALOE’S HOUSE – DAY
Lynn tells Aloe about Mo’s threat and wants her help to convince Reed. Aloe has an idea.
INT. STRANGE SORCERER’S HOUSE – DAY
Nora apologizes to strange sorcerer about how she behave earlier. Strange sorcerer tells her the special disguise requires one’s life force to retain its nature and wearing it for too long will lead to her demise. She has to decide whether to continue or not.
Turning Point: Turns out wearing the disguise for too long will lead to Nora’s demise and must decide whether to go ahead with it.
Act 5:
EXT. STRANGE SORCERER’S HOUSE – DAY
Nora asks Old Beggar whether she should go ahead with the disguise or not. Old Beggar tells her to make the decision. It is about her life, and no one has the right but her.
INT. STRANGE SORCERER’S HOUSE – DAY
Nora tells strange sorcerer she wants to go ahead with the disguise. Strange sorcerer tells her he is ready to begin.
INT. GREAT HALL OF SKAI RUSE, AFFINITY ACADEMY – DAY
Mo threatens Zin that if he doesn’t allow him to do his duty and the school reputation is ruined, it will be in his hands. Zin tells him he will have a talk with teachers to let him do his duty.
INT. O’LLER AND ALOE’S HOUSE, RYSTER CITY – DAY
Lynn and Aloe use Dune family value to convince Reed to follow his father’s orders. Reed reluctantly agrees.
INT. STRANGE SORCERER’S HOUSE – DAY
After going through the procedure and checking herself in the mirror, Nora finds out that she is a very pretty woman and loving it, but strange sorcerer tells her he discovered the disguise will kill her sooner than he had imagined. He also warns her to avoid injuries that may impact her life force or her death will be quicker.
EXT. PORTAL GATE, RYSTER CITY – DAY
Nora is waiting with Aloe, Toto, Reed, and other children. Mo appears from the portal with Natchez and Sparrow agents. He casts a spell to lock down the place and orders Sparrow agents to examine Nora and children’s faces to find out who might be wearing a disguise. They find nothing and allow Nora, Aloe, Toto, Reed, and the children to go through the portal.
EXT. PORTAL GATE – LATER
Mani shows up and updates Old Beggar on what happened at Affinity Academy. Turns out Old Beggar is Terra and Mani’s Lord who is actually Shard. Both of them are wearing disguises, and Terra is behind Array getting into the Affinity Academy and exposing him.
Turning Point: Turns out Old Beggar is actually Terra the head of the Affinity Academy and Mani’s lord who is Shard.
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Subject line: Ben’s Setting Up The Future
What I learned doing this assignment is
Setups for future episode is like a bait for the audiences. Once they get a hold of it, they will not let go and make the decision at the end of the pilot to watch the entire series. They could become fans of the show from this point on.
This is another skill that increases pilot interest level.
ASSIGNMENT:
Go to your TV Pitch Bible: Look at the future episodes, five seasons, and character descriptions. Go to your BW Framework: Look at all the info there.
SETUPS FOR FUTURE EPISODES
– Nora enters the dangerous underworld of magic.
– Will Nora get caught?
– Will the disguise kills Nora before she learns magic?
– Will Nora learn magic?
– Will Mo take over Terra’s position?
– How will Terra deal with Mo betraying him?
– Will Nora change the rule?
– Why is magic taught to the pretty ones?
– Why is Terra helping Nora?
– Will Zin finds the evidence and exposes Mo?
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Subject line: Ben’s Adding Empathy/Distress!
What I learned doing this assignment is
I have never realized that Empathy/Distress is very important in connecting audience with story. I have seen movies and TV shows where empathy/Distress is present. And those movies and TV shows, I continued to watch them to find out what will happen to the character. But I have never stop to think that it is because of empathy/distress that was why I continued to watch. Now I know and will use it to my advantage.
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Subject line: Ben’s Stacks Intrigue
What I learned doing this assignment is
Stacking intrigues don’t just make every act interesting for the audience, they make turning point that is already strong more powerful. This can engage the audience and have the need to watch episode after episode. They also increase the interest level of the pilot.
I will continue to change or improve the intrigues I have at the moment.
2. Before each Turning Point, brainstorm ways to create intrigue for the Turning Point. Give us the TECHNIQUE and one sentence that tells how you’ll create intrigue for the Turning Point.
Teaser:
Intrigue: Sky shakes. Then a crack appears, turning into a tear across the sky.
Intrigue: Terra, Shard, and three sorcerers are in a rush to be somewhere.
Intrigue: The tear turns into a rift. Light spills out.
Intrigue: Plants are yanked off the ground, earth is torn from its place, everything is flying up.
Intrigue: The rift is sucking the earth.
Intrigue: The three sorcerers sacrifice their lives to seal the rift.
Turning Point: Terra, Shard, and the three sorcerers stopped the rift from wreaking havoc, but it’s still there, held together by giant chains.
Act 1:
Intrigue – Strange behaviour/Intriguing world: Parents are out shopping with their children. The children are all pretty looking.
Intrigue – Mystery: People believe that Nora is cursed and caused her mother’s death in childbirth.
Intrigue – Secret: Nora’s adopted father, Old Beggar, has found Nora’s real father she has been searching for.
Intrigue – Intriguing world: Nora discovers that her birth father abandoned her because she is ugly to learn
magic and bring pride to the family.
Turning Point: Nora discovers her birth father, Eucher, abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family. Turns out magic is taught to pretty ones.
Act 2:
Intrigue – Hidden Agenda: Sparrow agents carelessly grab the students in the class and out with them.
Intrigue – Strange behaviour: Sparrow agents gather the students in the hall and lock the door. Mo then orders them to check their faces.
Intrigue – Secret: Teachers are worried that what happened in the school, will not just ruin their reputation but also school’s reputation.
Intrigue – Mystery: Array is running from something or someone. Then he runs into a Sparrow agent who wants to arrest him.
Intrigue – Hidden agenda/Intriguing world: Nora asks Old Beggar why magic is important and if it is why is there a rule of teaching it only to the pretty ones. Old Beggar tells her all that he knows – when it was introduced, where, and by who and doesn’t know why.
Intrigue – Suspicion: Old Beggar is suspicious of what Nora is up to when she asks him why no one has ever tried to change the rule. Nora tells him about her decision to learn magic and wants his help to get into the Affinity Academy.
Turning Point/Midpoint: Nora tells Old Beggar her decision to learn magic to prove Eucher wrong and wants his help to get into the Affinity Academy.
Act 3:
Intrigue – Secret/hidden agenda: Array is ugly and uses the disguise to get into the Affinity Academy to learn magic.
Intrigue – Strange Behaviour: Array is wearing a disguise.
Intrigue – Mystery: Aloe is going to the Affinity Academy for a mission, not to learn magic.
Intrigue – Danger: Array uses supplies run to get out of the Affinity Academy but discovers it is a trap, and Natchez arrests him.
Intrigue – Intriguing world: Nora tries to find a job from the tavern. The owner laughs at her and instructs his men to throw her out. Nora goes to grocery man to look for work, but grocery man mocks her. She steals his money but get caught and beaten almost to death.
Turning Point: Grocery man mocks Nora, and she steals his money but gets caught and beaten almost to death.
Act 4:
Intrigue – Danger: The people helping grocery man catch Nora and badly beat.
Intrigue – Secret: Old Beggar has a plan that will help Nora get into the Affinity Academy, but he cannot tell her what it is.
Intrigue – Danger/intriguing world: Nora has a fever Old Beggar can’t bring down and the doctor refuses to see her.
Intrigue – Hidden Agenda: Strange sorcerer asks Old Beggar if he explained to Nora everything about the disguise. Old Beggar believes that Nora finding it out from him might change her mind and hopes that it is the case.
Intrigue – Intriguing World: Mo executes Array for breaking the rule.
Intrigue – Conspiracy: Mo is plotting with Kins and teachers to take over Terra’s position.
Intrigue – Secret Identity: Kins addresses Mo as the true head of the Affinity Academy in secret.
Intrigue – Hidden Layer: The special disguise requires the wearer’s life force to retain its nature and wearing it for too long will lead to Nora’s demise.
Turning Point: Turns out wearing the disguise for too long will lead to Nora’s demise and must decide whether to go ahead with it.
Act 5:
Intrigue – Strange Behaviour: Terra and Shard are wearing disguises.
Intrigue – Mystery: Terra pretends to be Nora’s adopted father and helps her get into the Affinity Academy when he is the head of the school.
Intrigue – Conspiracy: Terra is Shard’s lord who informed the authorities about Nora’s plan to break the rule.
Intrigue – Betrayal: Terra conspired with Array to get into the Affinity Academy and exposed him.
Intrigue – Danger: Nora goes ahead with the disguise and strange sorcerer tells her the disguise will kill her sooner that he had imagined.
Intrigue – Hidden Agenda: Terra exposed Array to alert Mo about the possibility of people disguising themselves to learn magic.
Turning Point: Turns out Old Beggar is actually Terra the head of the Affinity Academy and conspired with Mani who is Shard and caused Nora pain.
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Subject line: Ben’s Open Loops and Mysteries
What I learned doing this assignment is
I looked through the outline and listed mysteries and open loops that are obvious. There are a lot in there I cannot see right now. Others will show up in scenes. Having these mysteries and open loops have shot up the interest level of the pilot. Without building them in in advance, I believe that the interest level of the pilot would have not gone anywhere. It would have been an average pilot. Not anymore.
ASSIGNMENT
4. Tell us which Open Loops and Mysteries you’ve added and the effect on the interest level of the outline.
Main Mystery: Magic is taught to pretty ones.
Sub-Mysteries:
What caused the rift?
What happened at Affinity Academy that will destroy its reputation?
What has Array done?
Did Rain cause her mother’s death in childbirth?
Why is Terra helping Rain get into the Affinity Academy?
What is Aloe mission in going into the Affinity Academy?
What is the relationship between Terra and Rain?
What is the relationship between O’ller, Terra, and Rain?
Main Open Loop: Will Rain learn magic?
Sub-Open Loops:
Will Mo replace Terra?
Will Terra repair the rift?
Will the rift destroy the world?
Will Terra find out Mo’s scheme with teachers? And what will become of their relationship?
Will Rain get into the Affinity Academy?
Will Old Beggar help Rain?
What will Rain do now that she knows the truth why Eucher abandoned her?
Will Rain get caught?
Will the disguise kill Rain before she learns magic?
Will Rain change the rule?
Will Array escape or get caught?
What will happen to Array now that he is arrested?
Will Rain find out who her adopted father really is?
How will Rain deal with Terra when she finds out the truth? And what will become of their relationship?
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Subject line: Ben’s Layers and Reveals
What I learned doing this assignment is
Making sure that there is some sort of layers and reveals in every act, which increases audience interest.
ASSIGNMENT
4. Tell us which Layers, Cover Ups, and Reveals you’ve added to the outline.
Act 1:
Surface: Rain is an ugly beggar girl.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: Rain was abandoned.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: She has been searching for her father for years.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>How revealed: Rain’s adopted father, Old Beggar, tells her that he found her real father.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Surface: Rain’s birth father, Eucher, abandoned her because she caused her mother’s death in childbirth.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: Eucher abandoned Rain because she is ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: Eucher abandoned Rain because magic is taught to pretty ones.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>How revealed: Rain confronts Eucher to find out the truth about her abandonment.
Act 2:
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Surface: Mo is the head of the Affinity Academy.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He is acting head.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He is the head of the Sparrow Agency.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He is plotting with Kins and teachers to take over Terra’s position.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: Kins and teachers address him as the true head of the Affinity Academy.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>How revealed: Zin is suspicious that Mo conspired with Array. Kins is worried that Zin knows about their plan.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Surface: Array burns down supplies building.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: Array is using supplies run as his plan to escape.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>How revealed: Array asks Jitt what Affinity Academy is planning to do about the supplies.
Act 3:
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Surface: Beggars are just homeless people.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: They were abandoned by their families because magic is taught to pretty ones.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>How revealed: Two teens talk about how they are luck their families didn’t abandon them like beggars.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Surface: Mani can get Rain into the Affinity Academy.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He is a con man.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>How revealed: Old Beggar finds him to know what Mo has done to Array.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Surface: Array burned supplies and Mo orders people go for supplies run.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: Mo is using Array’s plan against him to lure him into a trap.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>How revealed: Array joins the people going for supplies run and is caught.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Surface: Jitt is a student in Affinity Academy.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: Jitt is not real. Just a wood.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: Mo is using him to lure Array and also as a mark to identify Array.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>How revealed: Before Mo executes Array, Sparrow agents bring in dead body of Jitt. He turns out to be a wood Mo used to lure Array.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Surface: Array has committed a crime.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He is wearing disguise.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He is ugly.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He broke the rule to learn magic.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>How revealed: Natchez arrests Array and takes him to execution ground. Before Mo executes him, Array who disguised as Jitt turns out to be an ugly one and has broken the rule.
Act 4:
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Surface: Authorities have found out about Rain planning to break the rule and arrest her.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: Mani informed authorities and conspired with the man in charge.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>How revealed: Authority man shows Mani Rain being tortured.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Surface: The special disguise can help Rain get into the Affinity Academy.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: The special disguise requires one’s life force and will kill the wearer.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>How revealed: Strange sorcerer tells Rain the special disguise comes at a cost and she has to decide whether to continue or not.
Act 5:
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Surface: Old Beggar is Rain’s adopted father and a beggar.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He is actually Terra the head of Affinity Academy.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He is wearing disguise.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He is Shard’s lord
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He conspired with Array.
<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Layer beneath: He exposed Array.
Layer beneath: He conspired with Mani.
How revealed: After helping Rain get into the Affinity Academy, he finds Mani to know what Mo has done to Array.
Surface: Mani can get Rain into the Affinity Academy.
Layer beneath: He is wearing disguise.
Layer beneath: He is actually Shard.
Layer beneath: He is Terra’s man.
Layer beneath: He conspired with Terra.
How revealed: Old Beggar finds him to know what Mo has done to Array.
Surface: Affinity Academy knows about children using disguise to break the rule.
Layer beneath: It’s part of Terra’s plan.
How revealed: Old Beggar finds Mani to know about what Mo has done to Array.
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Subject line: Ben’s Character Story Lines
What I learned doing this assignment is
I have never thought of creating character story lines before I start working on the script. I just jump in there and start writing, but this is different. It is better. I now know where my character story start, what happens in the middle till the end. I believe this will make writing easier because I have already thought everything out.
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Subject line: Ben’s Pilot Structure
What I learned doing this assignment is
I tried to make the structure about Rain and left out other stories for sake of the flow, but that may change in the future, considering that other stories have strong turning points also. Especially Array reveal of who he is.
ASSIGNMENT
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1. Present the first draft of your pilot Acts.
PILOT STRUCTURE
Teaser:
Essence: A rift appears in the sky, sucking land and everything into it. Terra and four sorcerers attempt to seal it, with four sorcerers sacrificing their lives.
Turning Point: Terra and four sorcerers stopped the rift from wreaking havoc, but it’s still there, held together by giant chains.
Act 1:
Essence: Rain is an ugly beggar girl shun by everyone, even beggars and ugly ones. Her adopted beggar sister has taken over their shelter and forces her out of the city. There is rumour that she caused her mother’s death in childbirth.
Turning Point: Rain discovers her birth father, Eucher, abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family. Turns out magic is taught to pretty ones.
Act 2:
Essence: Rain locks herself in the shelter after finding out the truth of her abandonment. Old Beggar tries to make her feel better. It doesn’t work.
Turning Point/Midpoint: Rain tells Old Beggar her decision to learn magic to prove Eucher wrong and wants his help to get into the Affinity Academy.
Act 3:
Essence: Old Beggar refuses to help Rain because of the rule. Rain decides to find her own way and meets Mani who can get her into the Affinity Academy, but she has to pay double the charge. Rain looks for a job.
Turning Point: Grocery man mocks Rain, and she steals his money but gets caught and beaten almost to death.
Act 4:
Essence: Rain uses her condition and life to threaten Old Beggar into helping her. Left with no choice, Old Beggar takes Rain to strange sorcerer who can make her a special disguise.
Turning Point: Turns out wearing the disguise for too long will lead to Rain’s demise and must decide whether to go ahead with it.
Act 5:
Essence: Rain goes ahead with the disguise and returns to the city with Old Beggar to join the children. They get into the Affinity Academy as new recruits.
Turning Point: Turns out Old Beggar is actually Terra the head of the Affinity Academy and conspired with Mani who caused Rain pain.
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Subject line: Ben’s Amazing Inciting Incident
What I learned doing this assignment is
I used to think that Inciting Incident is the conflict that causes the character to go on the journey, but I’ve realized it’s actually made up of two things.
ASSIGNMENT
1. What is the “Inciting Incident” of your series that this pilot needs to deliver powerfully?
– Rain discovers her birth father abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family and must get into the Affinity Academy to learn magic and prove her birth father wrong.
2. Give us the main beats of that Inciting Incident:
Intriguing Concept: An ugly beggar decides to learn magic and prove her birth father wrong, but magic is taught to pretty ones.
Act 1: Rain is an ugly beggar girl shun by everyone, even beggars and ugly ones. Her adopted beggar sister has taken over their shelter and forces her out of the city.
Midpoint: Rain’s adopted father, Old Beggar, finds her birth father, and she discovers that he abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family. Rain decides to learn magic and prove her birth father wrong.
Lock In: Rain goes ahead with the disguise that will kill her and gets into the Affinity Academy to learn magic.
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Subject line: Ben’s Big Picture Components
What I learned doing this assignment is
Discovering the most important things in my story, and using them as reference, which means that I will be writing from things that come from my story than just writing things I don’t know where they come from.
ASSIGNMENT
1. Give us the basic Series Info:
SERIES INFO:
World: The cruel underworld of magic where learning magic is highly regarded, but the rule must be followed, or anyone who breaks it is executed without trial.
Main mystery: Magic is taught to pretty ones.
Impossible Goal: Learning magic without getting caught.
Main Conflict: Rain broke the rule.
Second Mystery: Rift in the sky.
Season 1 Arc: From discovering her birth father abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family to getting into the Affinity Academy to learn magic and getting caught to joining Terra to change the rule.
Season 1 Protagonist Internal Journey: Rain goes from being antisocial and distrustful to making friends and believing in them.
2. Tell us the basic Pilot Info:
PILOT INFO:
Pilot Conflict: Rain’s birth father, Eucher, abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family.
Main Characters Introduced: Rain, O’ller, Terra, Reed, Mo.
Inciting Incident of Season 1: Rain must get into the Affinity Academy to learn magic and prove her birth father wrong.
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Subject line: Ben’s Episode Titles
What I learned doing this assignment is
I jumped to this assignment to catch up and I discovered I’m following the same pattern I always have – getting everything right for the first time. After a day of doing that, I have decided to use whatever title I think work for the episode whether it’s a cliché or not and leave the rest for future discovery.
ASSIGNMENT
2. Select the titles that stand out, but be open to even better ideas in the future.
EPISODE TITLES
Episode 1: Breaking the Rule
Episode 2: Divided
Episode 3: A Way Out
Episode 4: Unlocking Your Potential
Episode 5: Not Everyone is Gifted in Magic
Episode 6: Cursed
Episode 7: The Plan
Episode 8: Lift the Curse
Episode 9: Escape Plan
Episode 10: The Art of Manipulation
Episode 11: Exposed
Episode 12: Great Things
Episode 13: Changing the Rule
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Subject line: Ben’s Intrigue Patterns
What I learned doing this assignment is
I’m going for perfection when this is just first draft. And because of it I haven’t been able to post my assignment sooner. I don’t know when I will let it go, but it’s something definitely working on.
My BW framework has intrigues I left out when I was writing descriptions because I felt that they didn’t belong in there, but this assignment showed me that they do in fact belong in there. They double the intrigue of what I have already written. Now, I’m using those intrigues in my BW framework to point the reader to certain things.
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What I learned doing this assignment is
I realized I have been using one of the investigation tools to mine my story. And when I try to use other investigation tools, I find myself coming back to that one investigation tool. I need to get used to using whatever investigation tool is needed for certain situation.
I thought I had come up with everything I needed, but I found loopholes and a few things that will change who goes up against Terra at the end of season five. All I have to do is set up everything across four seasons to get to season five, if it does get to that.
I also realized I can’t think beyond what I have already discovered. Maybe I’m not being intentional enough or I think what I have discovered is enough and not look deeper. So I will leave things like that for future discoveries.
ASSIGNMENT:
Do a complete investigation on your TV Pitch Bible to discover more depth, layers, and intrigue.
3. Evaluate the possibilities and decide what you are going to use in the different parts of your TV Pitch Bible. Divide the answers into three categories:
Use in TV Pitch Bible.
– Reed will be plotting to take control of his father power — this will also go in the BW framework.
– Reed purpose will change to him wanting his father to experience being controlled – this will also go in the BW framework.
– In Season Five, the number of people up against Terra is less. Not the entire underworld of magic anymore. Terra planned everything from the beginning to make sure no one opposes him in the end. He has the entire world in the palm of his hand.
Use in Episodes.
– Terra hands over his position to Mo. To prevent future troubles, Mo will try to kill Terra, but Terra uses their friendship to make Mo spare him.
– Mo discovers Rain is searching for a way to lift curse, so he sends Natchez and Sparrow to investigate Rain.
– Rain turns out cursed. To prevent Rain discovering his conspiracy, Terra executes his plan a head of time — he exposes Rain.
– Strange man turns out to be Terra’s man planning to acquire power, so Terra uses Mo to remove him.
– Rain discovers a sorceress who believes she is meant to accomplish great things cursed her, but the curse can be undone if she accomplishes her mission. A mission which will be reveal to her by following the signs.
Don’t use.
– I haven’t discovered something I wouldn’t use.
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Subject line: Ben’s Episode Descriptions
What I learned doing this assignment is
I have started learning to let go of perfection. It’s difficult, but I will get there.
What I have noticed is that doing descriptions for the episode is not different from doing descriptions for five seasons. All it took was thinking big picture and throw out what I didn’t need. All that’s left is to improve it in future.
Assignment
EPISODE DESCRIPTIONS
EPISODE 1: Old Beggar helps Rain get into the Affinity Academy to learn magic.
Rain’s adopted father, Old Beggar, tells Rain he found her birth father. When Rain discovers that her birth father abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family, she must confront her worst fear.
Rain tells Old Beggar her decision to learn magic and prove her birth father wrong and wants Old Beggar’s help to get into Affinity Academy. Old Beggar brings Rain to strange sorcerer, who can make her a special disguise, but it comes with a great price. Rain goes ahead with it and strange sorcerer discovers that the disguise will kill Rain faster.
EPISODE 2: Rain, Aloe, and Reed attempt to rescue the new recruits from strange beasts, but fall into a trap
Affinity Academy sends the new recruits to strange world to tame the creatures as their training companions. But the new recruits have disagreements that divide them. And when one of the team is captured by the creatures, Rain must face her worst fear.
She joins Aloe, Reed, and their team to rescue their people, but discover that Peach, who brought them the news, is actually one of the creatures and has lured them into a trap.
EPISODE 3: Rain, Reed, Aloe, and the new recruits are trap in creatures’ lair.
Having fallen into a trap, Rain, Aloe, Reed, and their team must battle their way out, but when they are forced into the creatures’ lair, they must face their worst fear. Rain, Aloe, and Reed must lead their team through the creatures’ lair to find a way out.
While escaping the creatures, Rain, Aloe, Reed, and their team run into giant and dangerous creatures. The battle between giant creatures over the territory make a way out for Rain, Aloe, Reed, and their team. After escaping, Rain, Aloe, and Reed decide to find other teams.
EPISODE 4: Rain, Reed, Aloe, and the new recruits work together to tame beasts.
Rain, Aloe, Reed, and their team find the last team of the new recruits and propose they work together to tame creatures, but refuse. When they encounter the creatures, the new recruits must confront their worst fear.
Aloe makes them see the consequences of their action. Realizing what would happen, the new recruits finally work together, taming the creatures, but discover all that happened was an illusion and have passed the test.
EPISODE 5: Rain discovers she can’t learn magic.
Rain’s teacher, Chasse, demonstrates and lays out instructions on how to master a simple and necessary step toward learning magic. But when Chasse tells the class to master the step, Rain has trouble with it and must face her fear. Rain turns to books and finds solutions that can help her master the step, but she still can’t do it.
Rain searches for answers and is told anyone who can’t learn magic is because they aren’t gifted in magic and will never learn.
EPISODE 6: Rain discovers she’s curse to never learn magic.
When Rain’s teacher, Chasse, reveals to the class that another test is coming up in three days and anyone who can’t conjure up a ball of light will be dismiss, Rain must confront her worst fear. She turns to books and strange spells to learn magic.
But all failed and must seek help from Terra. Terra takes Rain to an elder of Affinity Academy who discovers she’s cursed to never learn magic and he can’t undo the curse.
EPISODE 7: Zin discovers Mo’s scheme, but gets caught.
Zin’s informant is urgently called to a meeting in the middle of the night. When Zin’s informant tells Zin Mo is executing his plan tonight, Zin must face his worst fear. He orders Natchez and Sparrow agents to arrest Mo with him.
Together, Zin’s informant takes them to meeting location, but Zin discovers Mo set him up and gets caught.
EPISODE 8: Rain, Aloe, and Reed go out to the world to lift the curse, but are tricked and captured by Strange man.
When Rain discovered she’s cursed, she must confront her worst fear. She, Aloe, and Reed go out to the world and find a way to lift the curse. They find no one who can, but come across a strange man who tells them about a mythical creature with magic that can lift any curse.
Rain, Aloe, and Reed travel to the creature’s location and kill it, but discover the strange man has lured them into a trap and captures them.
EPISODE 9: Rain, Aloe, and Reed devise a plan to make Aloe escape and get help, but she gets caught.
Strange man tortures Rain, Aloe, and Reed to get the information out of them, but when they refuse and Strange man threatens to kill them, Rain and Aloe must face their worst fear.
Together with Reed, they devise a plan for Aloe to escape and get help. Aloe escapes, but Strange man captures her.
EPISODE 10: Mo and his Sparrow agents rescue Rain, Aloe, and Reed.
When Terra receives a message from Shard about Rain, Aloe, and Reed being held captive by Strange man to blackmail Affinity Academy, he must confront his worst fear. He orders Mo to kill Strange man and rescue Rain, Aloe, and Reed.
Mo takes Natchez and Sparrow agents and travels to meet up location, but the Strange man has sent one of his men. Mo orders Natchez to kill the man and finds Strange man’s hideout. Natchez and Sparrow agents find the hideout and it turns out Strange man conspired with Mo to kill Rain. Mo kills Strange man and rescues Rain, Aloe, and Reed.
EPISODE 11: Mo takes over Terra’s position.
Kins kills all the guards in the prison and sets Zin free. When Kins tells Mo Zin escaped, he must face his worst fear. He orders Kins to gather their men and Sparrow agents to execute the plan ahead of time.
Mo comes face to face with Terra and forces him to hand over his position, but Mo discovers Terra has been planning to pass the position over to him.
EPISODE 12: Reed and Aloe help Rain investigate who curse her, but Sparrow agents arrest her.
Rain, Aloe, and Reed come to Ryster City and investigate her birth father to discover who cursed her and lift the curse. When their investigation leads nowhere, Rain must face her worst fear. She hires beggars to do her investigation.
The beggars find Rain’s midwife who might have all the answers she needs, but her cover is blown and Natchez with Sparrow agents arrest her and taken to Affinity Academy.
EPISODE 13: Terra sends Shard and his men to rescue Rain from the prison.
Natchez and Sparrow agents bring Rain to Affinity Academy and lock her up. When Kins tells Terra the situation, he must confront his worst fear. He devises a plan and sends Shard and his men to rescue Rain.
Shard travels to Affinity Academy, breaks into the prison and rescues Rain. After rescuing Rain, Shard brings her to Terra, who convinces her to join him in his quest to change the rule.
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Subject line: Ben’s Episode List Rough Draft
What I learned doing this assignment is
I didn’t think I would come up with 13 episodes. I was thinking of 8, but the hardest part was coming up with the events for each episode. I know I was working on the main events only, but it was still difficult and requires a lot of thinking. Episode 1 was easy. I did a lot of thinking on that already. The rest, some of them I came up with more after a lot of thinking while the others have less. I will leave all that to when I start working on the outlines.
EPISODE 1: Old Beggar helps Rain get into the Affinity Academy to learn magic.
– Rain’s adopted father, Old Beggar, tells Rain he found her birth father.
– Rain goes to Eucher’s house to find out why he abandoned her. Turns out it’s because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family.
– Hurt, Rain locks herself away.
– Rain tells Old Beggar her decision to learn magic and wants him to help her find a way to get into the Affinity Academy.
– Old Beggar refuses to help her. He doesn’t want to send her to her death.
– Rain finds two average teens talking about a man who can help anyone get into any school.
– Rain tries to get the information out of them, but they run away to avoid her giving them her bad luck.
– Rain threatens one of the teens in the market, forcing her to tell Rain the man’s name and where to find him.
– Rain asks Mani at the old dock if he can get her into the Affinity Academy.
– The Mani takes advantage of Rain and charges her double.
– Rain tries to find a job in a tavern, the tavern owner laughs at her and orders his men to throw her out.
– Rain tries out grocery stall. Grocery man mocks her so Rain steals his money bag, but gets caught and beaten almost to death.
– Rain uses her condition and life to threaten Old Beggar to help her.
– Old Beggar reluctantly agrees to help her.
– Old Beggar brings Rain to Strange sorcerer who can make her a special disguise, but wearing it for too long will lead to her demise.
– Rain goes ahead with the disguise, but strange sorcerer tells because of her condition, the disguise will kill her faster.
– Old Beggar and Rain return to Ryster city.
– Rain and the children go through the portal gate to Affinity Academy as new recruits.
EPISODE 2: Rain, Aloe, and Reed attempt to rescue the new recruits from strange beasts, but fall into a trap
– Terra explains to new recruits the importance of finding and taming the beasts as their training companions.
– The new recruits, including Rain, go through the large portal.
– In strange new world, the new recruits have no idea where to go and decides to
pick a leader, but it causes disagreements that result in three groups, each going in different direction.
– Risa, Laison, and their group are captured by people they believe to be from another magic
schools, but Risa escape.
– Risa runs into Rain and Aloe and tells them what happened.
– Aloe suggests they find Reed and Toto to rescue their people.
– Risa brings back, Rain, Aloe, Reed, and his group to rescue Laison and his group, but find the camp was never there.
– Risa, Rain, Aloe, Reed, and his group meet Peach being chase by a strange beast.
– The creature runs off and Peach tells them Tinn and their group need help fighting off the creatures.
– Peach brings Rain, Aloe, Reed, and his group to mountain with many caves.
– Peach turns out to be one of the creatures and has lured Rain and the others into a trap.
EPISODE 3: Rain, Reed, Aloe, and the new recruits are trap in creatures’ lair.
– Rain, Aloe, Reed, and the new recruits try to fight there way out, but can’t.
– Rain, Aloe, and Reed lead the new recruits into the creatures’ lair.
– In the cavern, Rain, Aloe, and Reed lead the new recruits through a dangerous passage.
– The passage collapses, cutting off the creatures.
– Rain, Aloe, Reed, and the new recruits can’t go back and must find another way out.
– Reed leading the way, the new recruits find a dead end and must retrace their steps.
– Rain, Aloe, Reed, and the new recruits find several passages and must choose one.
– The passage leads Rain and the new recruits to poisonous area.
– Rain, Aloe, Reed, and the new recruits find another passage that leads them to the creatures.
– The creatures chase Rain, Aloe, Reed, and the new recruits to an area they are afraid to go in.
– The creature of this lair is a giant one. While trying to kill Rain and the rest, it steps into another giant creature’s territory.
– The two giants creatures battle it out. The destruction they cause make a way out for Rain and the rest.
– Rain, Aloe, Reed, and the new recruits take the opportunity to escape.
EPISODE 4: Rain, Reed, Aloe, and the new recruits work together to tame beasts.
– Rain, Reed, Aloe and the new recruits search for Laison and his group.
– Rain, Reed, Aloe and the new recruits find Laison and his group and learn there was some sort of a spell that created illusion and were never captured.
– Aloe suggests they work together if they’re to succeed, but Laison refuses and goes his own way with his group.
– Laison runs into the creatures and barely escape, having lost almost his entire group.
– Laison and what’s left of his group meet up with Rain, Aloe, Reed, and the new recruits, but blames what happened on Reed and still refuses to work with them and somehow convinces Tinn to stay away from Reed with group, but stay close.
– Rain, Aloe, Reed, Tinn, Laison, and the new recruits find the creatures, but don’t work together to tame them, resulting in failure and casualties.
– Tinn, Laison, and the new recruits realize the only they can survive and tame the creatures is to work together as one.
– Tinn and Laison work with Rain, Aloe, Reed, and the new recruits, taming the creatures, but discover all that happened was to unlock their potential to learn magic and a test.
EPISODE 5: Rain discovers she can’t learn magic.
– Rain’s teacher, Chasse, walks into the class and explains the first step in learning magic to students.
– Then she conjures a ball of light in her palm and tells the students to do the same.
– The students try and can’t do it.
– Chasse tells them to clear their minds.
– The students do so, but still can’t do it.
– Chasse ends the lesson and tells the students to learn what she taught them.
– Rain tries to conjure a ball of light in her room, but can’t do it.
– In the class Chasse finds out if the students have learned what she taught them.
– Some students have learned to cast balls of light.
– Rain and a few students are still struggling.
– Chasse ends the class tells Rain and the few students they must learn what she taught them.
– Rain finds a quiet place in the forest and tries to create a ball of light. Nothing happens.
– Rain goes to the library to do research.
– She finds information that will help her learn to conjure a ball of light.
– Rain tries out what she learned from the books in the forest. It still doesn’t help.
– In the class Chasse tests the students. All students can create balls of light, but not with ease and Rain still can’t do.
– Chasse tells Rain she must learn what she taught her no matter what.
– Chasse ends the class and tells the students to be really good at conjuring the ball of light.
– Rain does some research and learns that some people are not gifted in magic and will never learn.
EPISODE 6: Rain discovers she’s curse to never learn magic.
– In the class, Chasse tests the students and all can conjure a ball of light with ease except Rain.
– Chasse reveals to class that another test is coming up in three days and anyone who can’t conjure up a ball of light will be dismiss.
– Scared, Rain finds Chasse and tells her her trouble.
– Chasse brings Rain to Terra in Great Hall of Skai Ruse.
– She explains Rain has trouble learning magic.
– Terra casts a spell, but finds nothing wrong with Rain.
– Terra takes Rain to an elder of Affinity Academy who secludes himself in the mountain and explains everything to him.
– The elder does magic spell and discovers Rain is cursed and will never learn magic.
EPISODE 7: Zin discovers Mo’s scheme, but get caught.
– Zin’s informant is urgently called into a meeting in the middle of the night.
– In secret meeting location, Mo shows up and Kins tells everyone they are executing their plan tonight and tells everyone where to meet.
– Zin’s informant explains what’s happening to Zin.
– Zin orders Natchez and Sparrow agents to arrest Mo with him.
– At the meeting location, Zin discovers Mo set everything up from the beginning to catch him.
– Mo orders Natchez to kill Zin’s informant and arrest Zin.
EPISODE 8: Rain, Aloe, and Reed go out to the world to lift the curse, but are tricked and captured by an ambitious man.
– Rain, Aloe, and Reed travel across Shai’Ra, going from one school to another, looking for who can lift the curse. They find no one who can.
– Rain, Aloe, and Reed come upon a man who tells them about a mythical creature with magic that can lift any curse.
– Rain, Aloe, and Reed travel to the creature location.
– Rain, Aloes, and Reed attempt to kill the kill the creature, but it nearly kill them instead.
– Aloe suggests they come up with a plan to kill the creature.
– After some thoughts, Rain, Aloe, and Reed test out their plan. They failed.
– After a few try outs, they manage to kill the creature, but it turns out the ambitious man tricked them and captured them.
EPISODE 9: The ambitious man holds Rain, Reed, and Aloe as leverage.
– The ambitious man’s men throw Rain, Aloe, and Reed in a cage.
– One by one, the ambitious man tortures Rain, Aloe, and Reed to get the information about Affinity Academy out of them.
– When Rain, Aloe, and Reed don’t give the ambitious man any information, he threatens to kill one of them and sends their body to Affinity Academy as a message.
– Rain, Aloe, and Reed learn the ambitious man wants to use them to make Affinity Academy submit to him.
EPISODE 10: Mo and his Sparrow agents rescue Rain, Aloe, and Reed.
– Terra receives a message from Shard about Rain, Aloe, and Reed being captured.
– Terra summons Mo, tells him about the situation, and orders him to kill the ambitious man.
– Mo, Natchez, and Sparrow agents set out.
– Mo and Natchez go to meet up location, but find someone else the ambitious man sent to meet them.
– Mo orders Natchez to kill the man and find the ambitious man hideout.
– Natchez finds the ambitious man hideout.
– Turns out the ambitious man conspired with Mo to kill Rain, but failed.
– Using that, Mo kills the ambitious man to cover up everything.
EPISODE 11: Mo takes over Terra’s position.
– Zin escapes from the prison.
– Kins tells Mo Zin has escaped.
– Mo orders kins to gather his men and execute their plan ahead of time.
– Mo confronts Terra in the Great Hall of Skai Ruse to force him to hand over his position.
– Turns out Terra never wanted the position and has been planning to hand the it over to Mo.
EPISODE 12: Reed and Aloe help Rain investigate who curse her, but Sparrow agents arrest her.
– Rain, Aloe, and Reed come to Ryster City.
– Rain, Aloe, and Reed question her birth father’s neighbours.
– When their investigation leads to nowhere, Rain turns to beggars to find information.
– The beggars find the midwife who delivered Rain and has the answers, but Sparrow agents arrest Rain.
EPISODE 13: Terra sends Shard and his men to rescue Rain from the prison.
– Natchez throws Rain in the prison.
– Kins secretly leaves Affinity Academy and tells Terra.
– Terra devises a plan and sends Shard and his men to rescue Rain from the prison.
– After rescuing Rain, Terra tells Rain why he wants to change the rule and also convinces her
to join him in his quest.
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Subject line: Ben’s Show Summary
What I learned doing this assignment is
Using The Ozark example helped me find the intrigues I needed to write a better show summary. It is longer than three paragraphs Hal wanted me to do, but that’s okay. I have accomplished what I wanted and I there will be time in future to bring it down to three paragraphs. I haven’t tried out other formats though. I should find time and try them out. Who knows, I might discover something that surprises me.
PILOT AS INCITING INCIDENT
SHOW SUMMARY – DRAFT
Rain’s an ugly 15-yr-old girl dealing with her beggar’s life problems. Everyone, including beggars, even the ugly ones shun her; her jealous adopted beggar sister has taken over their shelter and force her out of the city or things could get worse. But all that changes when her adopted father, Old Beggar, found her birth father.
Wanting to find out the truth of her abandonment, Rain discovers that her birth father abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family.
Hurt, Rain locks herself away. When she emerged, Rain tells Old Beggar her decision to learn magic and prove her birth father wrong and wants Old Beggar to help get into Affinity Academy. Old Beggar refuses because magic is taught to pretty ones, and anyone caught breaking it is executed without trial.
Angered, Rain decides to find her own way. She meets Mani, who takes advantage of her and charges her double than he normal would. Rain then goes to find a job from a grocery man. Grocery man instead mocks her and Rain steals his money, but she gets caught and beaten almost to death.
Old Beggar finds a way to get the doctor to treat Rain and Rain uses her condition and life to threaten Old Beggar into helping her. Old Beggar brings Rain to his old acquaintance, strange sorcerer, who can make Rain a special disguise, but the disguise comes with a great price – wearing it for too long will lead to the person’s demise. Rain goes a head with it, but strange sorcerer tells her because of her condition, the disguise will kill her faster.
With sudden death in the corner and the possibility of getting caught and executed, Rain must work hard and quickly learn magic or die.
How does someone who might die or get caught any moment accomplish a goal that seems near, yet far?
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Subject line: Ben’s Character Descriptions
What I learned doing this assignment is
This assignment is very challenging. Perfection getting in the way, as always, no matter how many times I tell myself I need to let it go. It just happens. The most difficult thing with this assignment is that most characters have intrigues that happened in the past and putting that in the description was hard. The only character I wrote the description with ease is O’ller. Maybe because her part in the Binge Worthy Framework is about things that are happening right now and in the future. Rain, Terra, and Mo have things that happened in the past. Or a character is in possession of a body and deceiving everyone, like Rain. I had to choose how to write her character since her appearance is a woman and the reveal is a man in a woman’s body. It was truly difficult. Reed didn’t come off like others, I mean his intrigues in the Binge Worthy Framework didn’t seem much in the description. Perhaps I need to look into his character.
CHARACTER DESCRIPTIONS
MAIN CHARACTERS
RAIN
A vengeful and distrustful man betrayed and killed by his brother has one purpose — to exact revenge. To realize his vision, he killed and took over the body of innocent child — the one he’s currently using as a vessel to hide and seek revenge. He’s brutal, driven, antisocial and has lost faith in family.
When he discovered his brother cursed the girl her body he possess, his purpose becomes possible. To exact his revenge, he’s willing to play along to discover his brother’s conspiracy, conspired with his brother to break and change the rule, go ahead with the disguise that will lead to his demise, and use changing the rule to recruit the average and ugly ones to turn them into his army.
REED
A submissive and obedient son following his father’s orders to learn magic wants to become his own person. A goal that will require him to be rebellious, unforgiving, and do unimaginable things.
When he discovered the woman he loves isn’t who he thought she is and plan to change the rule, his dream become possible. With that in mind, he’s willing to hunt down and hurt the woman he loves, take his best friend hostage, use changing the rule to influence his father, and violate the most important thing to him, their family value.
MO
An uncompromising father and head of Sparrow Agency wants to make their family the most powerful family. A purpose that will make him abandon the woman he loves with his unborn child and plot with teachers to replace his best friend as the head of their school.
When he realized a girl who broke the rule to learn magic in their school will further his agenda, he’s willing to sacrifice others, use his son to hunt down the woman he loves to force her to change the rule, reveal the mystery of teaching magic to pretty ones to the world, and let his son defy him and break their family value.
TERRA
A Celestial amongst mortal with one vision — to comprehend his magic. A purpose that will make him deceive the entire world about the mystery of teaching magic to pretty ones, kill his own brother, and hold the woman he loves captive. He’s manipulative, deceptive, and passionate.
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Ironically, he created the world to comprehend the magic, but fall in love with the magic (woman).
O’LLER
A cold and indifferent mother, but nice to those she cares for, only wants one thing – to protect and keep her child safe. A good intention that will require her to do things she never thought she could. She’s focus and caring.
When Terra proposed to marry her and use their child for his own selfish motive, her vision becomes possible. With only protecting and keeping her child safe on her mind, she’s willing to marry her enemy, use magic with great price, adopt her niece as leverage, conspired with her enemy to curse and abandon her child, and fake her best friend and her child death to secretly train her army to bring down her enemy, all while under the nose of Terra.
SUPPORT AND ENVIRONMENT CHARACTERS
LAYOL SUBORDINATES
This group just wants their lord to recognize their loyalty. For that they will conspire, kill, and sacrifice their lives for their lord. Kins and Shard Spear are those people.
LIKE MOTHER, LIKE CHILD
This group is after their enemy and their enemy’s children’s lives, some of them may have views that are slightly different. For this, they are willing to deceive and conspire with those they love, waiting for an opportunity to strike when their enemy least expect it. Toto and his mother and Aloe and her mother (Thema) are in this group.
SPARROW AGENCY
An organization in Affinity Academy whose sole purpose is to ensure the rule is followed and carry out discipline across the entire Shai’Ra world. Sparrow Agent, Natchez, Mo, and other agents (Sparrow Agents) belong to this agency.
MAGIC SCHOOLS OF SHAI’RA
These schools teach magic and follow orders Affinity Academy pass down. They will do anything, even sacrifice their life for the good of their school. Zin of Affinity Academy, teachers, heads of those schools, elders, and students are in this group.
AVERAGE AND UGLY ONES
Their main purpose is to learn magic and fit in the world. They’re willing to do whatever it takes to achieve their goal, even change the rule, and go up against Affinity Academy or the entire world of magic. These are average and ugly children or even adults. Beggars also belong to this group.
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Subject line: Ben’s Five Seasons
What I learned doing this assignment is other than farming my Binge Worthy Framework to create five seasons, I was able to create descriptions that are to the point even though some of them are long. From this assignment I have noticed something wrong with most descriptions I read out there – in that those descriptions tend to include story B,C etc and not get to the point or lack hooks or what the story is really about. This assignment helped me avoid all that.
ASSIGNMENT:
WHITE PHOENIX FIVE SEASONS
SEASON ONE: LEARNING MAGIC
After Rain discovered her birth father abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family, she decides to learn magic and prove her birth father wrong. An impossible mission in a world that teaches magic to pretty ones, but all that change when her adopted father, Old Beggar, presents to her the plan she desperately needs for her vision to become a reality – using disguise to enter Affinity Academy and learn magic without getting caught and killed.
Unfortunately, Rain discovers she’s cursed to never learn magic and must find a way to lift the curse, but her cover’s blown before she does and Mo Dune, who has taken over the head of Affinity Academy, sends Sparrow agents to arrest her. Mo Dune tortures Rain to get the information out of her and when she doesn’t, he locks her up to be executed. Fortunately, Terra orders Shard Spear and his men to break into the prison and rescue Rain. After rescuing Rain, Terra convinces her to join him in his quest to change the rule.
SEASON TWO: CHANGING THE RULE
Mo Dune puts his son, Reed, in charge of hunting down Rain and prevent her from changing the rule. While surviving the hunt, Rain discovers the best way to change the rule is to recruit the average and ugly looking ones.
With the average and ugly looking ones, Rain resists Reed and his Sparrow agents as their first step toward changing the rule. But Rain never thought it would lead Mo Dune to gather the underworld of magic and reveal to them the mystery of teaching magic to pretty ones, uniting them to crush Rain and her average and ugly looking ones.
SEASON THREE: UNDERWORLD OF MAGIC GOES TO WAR WITH RAIN
Mo Dune, the Leader of the Great Alliance, leads the underworld of magic to crush Rain and her average and ugly looking ones. Faced with great challenge and can’t find a way to fend off the Great Alliance, Rain must accept the fact that their annihilation is inevitable.
Just when all seems lost, Terra provides Rain the solution she desperately needs — making a deal with the Lord of the Shadow Warriors. With the Shadow Warriors, Rain and the average and ugly looking ones defeat the Great Alliance, but Terra discovers Rain is actually his brother Whyller he’s been searching for and captures her.
SEASON FOUR: THE MAGIC OF SHAI’RA
After capturing Rain, Terra tries to convince her to save his life, but when Rain refused, Terra takes Aloe and Reed hostage to threaten her. Left with no choice, Rain must find a way to save Terra.
When she does, Rain discovers Terra deceived her into helping him find the magic of their world to harness its power, but doing so will destroy their world.
SEASON FIVE: INTELLIGENT BEINGS
Rain tells the underworld of magic Terra has found the source of their world magic and plans to harness it. It will not only make him the most powerful sorcerer, but doing so will destroy their world and must stop him, but the underworld of magic don’t believe Rain.
Rain reveals to them Terra is actually Skai Ruse and he introduced teaching magic to pretty ones to increase his magical powers, after which the underworld of magic bands with Rain to stop Terra from destroying their world. But Rain and the underworld of magic discover shocking truth — Terra is the Celestial who created their world to comprehend his magic (people and creatures of Shai’Ra who have become intelligent beings) and the magic of their world is the breakthrough Terra’s been searching for, and it will still destroy their world.
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Subject Line: Ben is ready for feedback!
What I learned doing this assignment is it wasn’t easy doing this assignment. I had to cut down
chunks of details, rearrange layers with information that would show up at different point in the
story, but the good news is, I’m happy with what I have done with my story. And everything is in
one place to look at when I need the information. It was worth doing this assignment.
And if anyone likes to exchange our Binge Worthy framework, please let me know.
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Subject line: Ben’s Intriguing Concept and World
What I learned doing this assignment is not just about discovering what makes my show unique. I have discovered about my world, something I haven’t looked at before. With this important discovery I now know how characters will react or treat each other when they are in this world.
ASSIGNMENT:
Present your concept and world.
1. Present your Concept.
A. When a beggar girl discovers her birth father
B. abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic
C. and bring pride to the family,
D. she decides to study magic and prove her birth father wrong.
2. Tell us the World of this show.
Unique Sub-World: The cruel underworld of magic that teaches magic to pretty ones.
Previously unexplored: How magic is highly regarded in this world, the value of learning magic.
The unknown: How the underworld of magic will react.
The unseen: The underworld of magic’s plan to keep the rule from being broken.
Unheard of Dangers: The underworld of magic will execute anyone who breaks the rule without trial.
Reason to explore it: There’s no better way to make Rain’s birth father a fool of himself – the irony in this situation.
WHITE PHOENIX WORLD: The cruel underworld of magic where learning magic is highly regarded, but the rule that magic is taught to pretty ones must be followed or anyone who breaks it is executed without trial.
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Subject line: Ben’s Creating Irony!
What I learned doing this assignment is if I look hard enough I would find any situations or characters I have created are actually irony even though I didn’t know. The only thing I can do is identify those situations or characters and I have my irony. It may take a while, but I believe that I will be able to do this with ease in future.
ASSIGNMENT 1: Example Show
Watch the next episode of your Example Show and notice where irony shows up in this show — both in this episode and throughout the episodes you’ve already seen.
Tell us the irony you have already discovered in the Example Show.
EXAMPLE SHOW IRONIES: PRISON BREAK
– Abruzzi betrayed Michael to make him tell Philly whereabouts of Fibonacci. Turns out they conspired to fool Philly.
– Philly and his men go to the address Michael gave him to find Fibonacci. Turns out Michael set him up to get caught by the police.
– Sebastian (Veronica’s ex-fiancé) messages Veronica to know if she’s okay. Turns out Sebastian is dead and his killer (Quinn) is using it to track Veronica’s location.
– Sara is having a bad day and sure Michael wouldn’t make her smile. Michael made her a paper flower that caused her to smile.
– Michael is using Sara, only to fall in love with her.
– Sara never wanted to fall in love with a convict, only to fall in love with one, Michael.
– Michael is breaking out his wrongly accused brother, Lincoln, but must also break out a mob boss and a murderer (criminals).
– COs investigated Michael to find out he didn’t get a whore for his conjugals. Everything turned out real, but the woman is really a whore and they fake their marriage.
– The credit card the woman handed Michael turned to be an access card.
– Quinn calls Kellerman and Hale to save him from the well, only to leave him to die.
ASSIGNMENT 2: Your Show
Look back through your previous assignments and find at least 20 different situations or character components that you could go opposite to create irony.
With each, brainstorm ideas for ways it could go opposite.
Select the ones that work well for the show and share the character and situational irony ideas with us.
CHARACTER IRONY
– To become his own person, Reed violates their family value (obedient), which is very important to him.
– Mo is uncompromising, but he lets his son violate their family value
– The Celestial (Terra) created Shai’Ra world to comprehend the magic, but falls in love with the magic (O’ller).
– Terra values ethics, but must break them to achieve his goal.
– Aloe pretends to protect Rain to kill her, only to fall in love with her.
– Reed hunts down Rain to stop her from changing the rule. Turns out he’s secretly helping her change the rule.
– Terra is like any one in Shai’Ra world, but he’s the Celestial who created the world.
– The people and the creatures of Shai’Ra world appear real, but they are magic.
– O’ller appears cold, but she’s nice to those she care for.
SITUATION IRONY
– Terra is manipulating Rain to change the rule to find his brother, but Rain is his brother.
– Mo deceives and plots to take Terra’s position, but it turns out Terra never wanted it and plan to hand it over to him.
– Magic is taught to pretty ones to save their dying world, but it’s to make the Celestial comprehend his magic.
– The Celestial created Shai’Ra world to comprehend the magic, but the magic became intelligent beings.
– Terra (Celestial) wants to kill Rain (the thing that prevents the Celestial understanding his magic), but he needs Rain to have breakthrough.
– In order to have a breakthrough, Terra must change the rule he introduced to lure his brother.
– Terra threatens to expose Mani to make him give Terra all his money. Turns out Terra conspired with Mani to test Rain.
– Rain recruits average and ugly ones to change the rule. She’s actually recruiting them to form an army to fight his brother.
– O’ller married her enemy Terra to save her child.
– Whyller killed Rain to take over her body. Rain is actually Whyller’s daughter.
– O’ller believes that Rain is her daughter, but Rain is her husband she is searching for.
– Reed believes his mother can make his father change his mind. Turns out his mother can’t.
– Rain believes her birth father abandoned because she caused her mother’s death in childbirth. Turns out her birth father abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family.
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Subject line: Ben’s Plot and Character Layers
What I learned doing this assignment is I realized I have never paid attention to layers that appear in the shows I watch, but the whole show is actually riddled with layers. When I look at my example show and think back to discover layers, I find that it’s full of them. I didn’t write down all the layers I have discovered in my example show because there is just too many of them. Some layers need the entire series to reveal them. Others show up in the episodes.
With my show, I have discovered layers that create new story lines, ones I didn’t think of before. And My story has changed so much from when I first thought of it. One of the support characters will now become a main character. Some characters I created to be good or bad and have been searching for what would make the audience not think of them the same, I have come up with those. I seem to love creating layers. I’m constantly thinking of what is beneath characters, plot, or anything, and my show turns out to have layers even audiences wouldn’t notice until I reveal them.
ASSIGNMENT 1: Example Show
Watch the next episode of your Example Show and notice how layers show up in this show — both in this episode and throughout the episodes you’ve already seen.
Tell us the layers you have discovered in the Example Show.
EXAMPLE SHOW LAYERS (SOME OF THEM): PRISON BREAK
– Michael robs the bank just to get caught. Turned out he did it to break his brother out of the prison.
– The tattoos on Michael’s entire body are actually his whole plan.
– Veronica who represented Michael in court turned out to be close to Michael.
– Lincoln killed the Vice President’s brother. Turned out he was setup.
– Michael turned out be a structural engineer and he designed the prison.
– Lincoln is actually Michael’s brother.
– Linc is Lincoln’s secret identity.
– Fish is Michael’s or any new prisoner’s secret identity.
– LJ is Lincoln’s son.
– Veronica is Lincoln’s ex-girlfriend.
– Abruzzi used the picture of Veronica in his possession to threaten Michael to tell them whereabouts of
Fibonacci. Turned out Abruzzi and Michael conspired to fool Philly.
– The address Michael told Philly turned out to be fake and has setup Philly to get caught by the police.
– The Vice President, Caroline, conspired with the Company to setup Lincoln.
ASSIGNMENT 2: Your Show
Discover the layers that could exist for your show.
1. Brainstorm a list of possible PLOT layers.
PLOT LAYERS
SURFACE: Terra, the head of Affinity Academy helped Rain enter Affinity Academy
to learn magic and prove her birth father wrong.
LAYER: DECEPTION: Terra wants to change the rule to fulfill the promise he made to his
deceased teacher. To take Affinity Academy to next level.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDA: Terra wants Rain to change the rule to find his brother to save his life.
LAYER: HIDDEN PLAN: Terra has found the source of their world magic and plan to harness
it to become the most powerful sorcerer, which turns out to be the breakthrough the celestial
has been searching to comprehend his magic, but that will bring the world and the magic that has turned into intelligent beings (people and creatures) will be gone.
LAYER: HIDDEN HISTORY: Whyller gave Eldore (Terra) the idea of teaching magic to
pretty ones, but Terra killed Whyller trying to stop him.
LAYER: MYSTERY: Magic is taught to pretty ones to increase Terra’s magical powers.
LAYER: STORY IS ANOTHER: The story is not about Rain learning magic to prove her birth father wrong, or Whyller seeking revenge on his brohter. It’s about a celestial trying to comprehend his magic. He created this world and everything in it is the magic he’s trying to comprehend.
LAYER: DECEPTION: Eldore (Terra) created the rift to deceive people that their world is dying and teaching magic to pretty ones will repair the rift.
LAYER: MYSTERY: Magic is taught to pretty ones to save their dying world.
LAYER: REAL MYSTERY: The people and the creatures of this world are the magic the celestial is trying to comprehend, and teaching magic to pretty ones is the way the celestial understand his magic.
LAYER: SCHEME: Mo lets Rain escape prison and change the rule to become the Leader of the underworld of magic.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDA: Rain is recruiting the average and ugly people to make an army to fight his brother.
2. Brainstorm a list of possible CHARACTER layers.
MAIN CHARACTER LAYERS
RAIN
SURFACE: She’s an ugly beggar girl shun and contempt.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDA: To take revenge on his brother, Eldore (Terra).
LAYER: MORAL ISSUE: Whyller kills and forcefully takes over people’s bodies.
LAYER: WEAKNESS: Whyller’s love for O’ller.
LAYER: CONSPIRACIES: With Terra, for Rain to disguise as a pretty girl and enter Affinity Academy to learn magic. With Terra, to change the rule of teaching magic to
pretty ones.
LAYER: SECRET: She’s not really Rain, but Whyller. Whyller killed Rain to take over her body.
He knows Terra cursed Rain. His soul is about to dissipate.
LAYER: DECEPTION: Whyller’s not going to Affinity Academy to learn magic, but to discover his brother’s conspiracy in cursing Rain. Everyone believes Rain is recruiting ugly and average people to change the rule, but she (Whyller) is actually turning them into his army to fight his brother.
LAYER: WOUND: Whyller’s brother killed him.
LAYER: SECRET IDENTITY: Rain is the mysterious White Phoenix recruiting average and ugly ones to change the rule. Whyller.
LAYER: MYSTERY: Whyller gave his brother the idea of teaching magic to pretty ones 800 years ago.
LAYER: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: Terra is his brother and O’ller is his wife. Terra killed Whyller 800 years ago. She’s the thing stopping the Celestial comprehending his magic.
REED
SURFACE: His father, Mo, wants him to stop Rain from changing the rule. He also wants to make Rain pay for betraying him.
LAYER: MORAL ISSUE: Violating their family value.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDA: To be his own person.
LAYER: DECEPTION: Everyone believes he’s hunting Rain to make her pay for lying to him,
but he’s actually helping Rain change the rule.
LAYER: CONSPIRACIES: He put his best friend, Toto, close to his father to sabotage
his father’s plans that may harm Rain.
LAYER: SECRET IDENTITY: Reed the Great Pretender.
LAYER: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: Mo is his father.
LAYER: WOUND: His father wants him to be someone great.
LAYER: WEAKNESS: He can’t stand up to his father/say “No” to his father.
MO
SURFACE: He’s the Head of Sparrow Agency doing his duty.
LAYER: MORAL ISSUE: Executes anyone who breaks the rule without trial.
LAYER: WEAKNESS: His son, Reed.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDA: To make his family the most powerful family.
LAYER: SECRET: He abandoned the woman he loved with unborn child to be with Reed’s mother, Lynn.
LAYER: CONSPIRACIES: He’s conspiring with Kins and teachers to take over Terra’s position.
LAYER: DECEPTION: Everyone believes he wants to stop Rain from changing the rule, but he’s forcing Rain to change the rule as part of his plan to become the leader of the underworld of magic.
LAYER: WOUND: His passed on teacher gave his rightful position to Terra.
LAYER: SECRET IDENTITY: Head Mo Dune.
LAYER: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: He’s Terra’s best friend.
TERRA
SURFACE: He’s Rain’s adopted father and secretly helped her break the rule to enter Affinity Academy.
LAYER: MORAL ISSUE: Readily commits unethical acts.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To find his brother to save his life. To comprehend the magic.
LAYER: CONSPIRACIES: With Rain, for Rain to disguise as a pretty girl and enter Affinity Academy to learn magic. With Rain, to change the rule of teaching magic to pretty ones. With Kins, for Kins to spy on Mo. With Anna and Shard Spear, to test Rain. With Eucher and Rain’s mother, O’ller, to curse and abandon new born baby Rain.
LAYER: SECRETS: His soul is on the verge of shattering. He killed his brother Whyller.
LAYER: DECEPTION: He lied to Rain that he’s changing the rule to fulfill his passed on teacher’s wishes when he’s changing the rule to lure his brother Whyller. He created a rift in the sky to make people believe that their world is dying and only teaching magic to pretty ones will repair it.
LAYER: WOUND: Wound: Being held in contempt.
LAYER: SECRET IDENTITY: Eldore, Celestial, Skai Ruse, Old Beggar and many others as Head of Affinity Academy.
LAYER: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: Rain is his daughter with O’ller. Whyller is his brother he killed 800 years ago. O’ller is his brother’s wife. He’s the Celestial who create this world to comprehend his magic (People and creatures of this world).
LAYER: MYSTERY: He introduced the rule of teaching magic to pretty ones 800 years ago to increase his magical powers.
LAYER: WEAKNESS: His love for O’ller.
CHARACTER TO UPGRADE TO MAIN CHARACTER
O’LLER
SURFACE: She’s conspiring with her daughter, Aloe.
LAYER: MORAL ISSUE: She uses spells with great price without second thoughts.
LAYER: CONSPIRACIES: With Terra, to curse and abandon newborn baby, Rain.
With Aloe, to protect Rain. With Aloe’s mother, to train her secret army to fight Terra.
With Aloe’s mother, to fake Aloe and her mother’s death in childbirth, and to adopt Aloe.
LAYER: WEAKNESS: Her daughter, Rain.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To protect Rain. To seek revenge for her husband.
LAYER: SECRETS: Aloe is her adopted daughter and Terra’s daughter. She used a dangerous spell to delay Rain’s growth in her womb for 800 years. Rain is actually her child with Whyller.
She will never have children because of the spell she used to delay Rain’s growth.
She married her enemy, Terra, to save her child, Rain – the spell was killing her with the child.
LAYER: DECEPTION: She conspired with Terra to find husband Whyller. She adopted Aloe as a leverage.
LAYER: WOUND: Terra killed her husband.
LAYER: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: Whyller is her husband and Terra is Whyller’s brother.
LAYER: SECRET IDENTITY: The flower.
SUPPORT CHARACTER LAYERS
ALOE
SURFACE: She’s conspiring with O’ller to carry out covert mission in Affinity Academy.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To have her mother’s back. To kill Rain.
LAYER: CONSPIRACIES: With her mother, to kill O’ller and her daughter Rain.
LAYER: SECRET: In love with Rain.
LAYER: DECEPTION: She’s using her mission to protect Rain to get close to her.
LAYAR: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: She’s Terra’s daughter, Rain’s cousin, and Whyller’s niece.
ALOE’S MOTHER
SURFACE: She’s helping O’ller train a secret army to bring down Terra.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To kill O’ller and Rain. To be with Terra.
LAYER: SECRET: In love with Terra.
LAYER: CONSPIRACY: With O’ller, to fake Aloe and her death in childbirth.
With Aloe, to kill O’ller and her daughter.
LAYER: DECEPTION: She lied to O’ller that she doesn’t approve of Terra using her
daughter for his own selfish motive to gain her trust.
LAYER: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: She’s O’ller’s friend and Terra’s righthand woman.
TOTO
SURFACE: He’s Aloe and Reed’s best friend working hard to learn magic and challenging
people stronger than him.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To return Mo to his mother’s side.
LAYER: SECRET: He’s Mo’s illegitimate child.
LAYER: WOUND: Mo abandoned him and his mother.
LAYER: CONSPIRACY: With Reed, to sabotage Mo’s plan that may harm Rain.
LAYER: DECEPTION: He’s using the chance to spy on Mo to discover his weaknesses.
TOTO’S MOTHER
SURFACE: A depressed woman.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To kill Lynn and Mo.
LAYER: DECEPTION: She fake depression to make Toto seek revenge.
LAYER: WOUND: The man she loved, Mo, abandoned her with a child for another woman, Lynn.
LAYER: SECRET: Lynn and Mo’s father want her gone.
LAYER: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: Mo and Toto’s mother were in love.
LYNN
SURFACE: A loving mother and wife.
LAYER: SECRET: She left Toto’s mother for dead.
LAYER: CONSPIRACY: With Mo’s father, to kill Toto’s mother.
LAYER: WOUND: Taking another person’s life.
KINS
SURFACE: He’s a teacher in Affinity Academy conspiring with Mo to take over
Terra’s position.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDAS: Wants Terra to recognize him as his most loyal subordinate.
LAYER: CONSPIRACY: With Terra, to take over Affinity Academy.
LAYER: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: He’s Terra’s subordinate.
SHARD SPEAR
SURFACE: Terra’s subordinate with the mission to protect Rain.
LAYER: CONSPIRACY: With Terra, to find Whyller.
LAYER: HIDDEN AGENDAS: Wants Whyller to take him back.
LAYER: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: He was Whyller’s subordinate and betrayed Whyller.
LAYER: SECRET: In love with Aloe.
3. Organize them each into a possible sequence of reveals.
PLOT POSSIBLE REVEAL SEQUENCE
SURFACE: Terra, the head of Affinity Academy helped Rain enter Affinity Academy to learn magic and prove her birth father wrong.
LAYER 1: DECEPTION: Terra wants to change the rule to fulfill the promise he made to his
deceased teacher. To take Affinity Academy to next level.
LAYER 2: MYSTERY: Magic is taught to pretty ones to save their dying world.
LAYER 3: SCHEME: Mo lets Rain escape prison and change the rule to become the Leader of the underworld of magic.
LAYER 4: HIDDEN AGENDA: Rain is recruiting the average and ugly people to make an army to fight his brother.
LAYER 5: HIDDEN AGENDA: Terra wants to change the rule to find his brother to save his life.
LAYER 6: HIDDEN HISTORY: Whyller gave Eldore (Terra) the idea of teaching magic to pretty ones, but Terra killed Whyller trying to stop him.
LAYER 7: DECEPTION: Eldore (Terra) created the rift to deceive people that their world is dying and teaching magic to pretty ones will repair the rift.
LAYER 8: MYSTERY: Magic is taught to pretty ones to increase Terra’s magical powers.
LAYER 9: HIDDEN PLAN: Terra has found the source of their world magic and plan to harness
it to become the most powerful sorcerer, which turns out to be the breakthrough the celestial
has been searching to comprehend his magic, but that will bring the world and the magic that has turned into intelligent beings (people and creatures) will be gone.
LAYER 10: REAL MYSTERY: The people and the creatures of this world are the magic the celestial is trying to comprehend, and teaching magic to pretty ones is how the celestial understand his magic.
LAYER 11: STORY IS ANOTHER: The story is not about Rain learning magic to prove her birth father wrong, or Whyller seeking revenge on his brohter. It’s about a celestial trying to comprehend his magic. He created this world and everything in it is the magic he’s trying to comprehend.
MAIN CHARACTERS POSSIBLE REVEAL SEQUENCE
RAIN
SURFACE: She’s an ugly beggar girl shun and contempt.
LAYER 1: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: Her birth father abandoned her because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family Terra is his brother and O’ller is his wife. Terra killed Whyller 800 years ago. She’s the thing stopping the Celestial comprehending his magic.
LAYER 2: SECRET IDENTITY: Rain is the mysterious White Phoenix recruiting average and ugly ones to change the rule. Whyller.
LAYER 3: SECRET: She’s not really Rain, but Whyller. Whyller killed Rain to take over her body. He knows Terra cursed Rain. His soul is about to dissipate.
LAYER 4: MORAL ISSUE: Whyller kills and forcefully takes over people’s bodies.
LAYER 5: DECEPTION: Whyller’s not going to Affinity Academy to learn magic, but to discover his brother’s conspiracy in cursing Rain. Everyone believes Rain is recruiting ugly and average people to change the rule, but she (Whyller) is actually turning them into his army to fight his brother.
LAYER 6: MYSTERY: Whyller gave his brother the idea of teaching magic to pretty ones 800 years ago.
LAYER 7: WOUND: Whyller’s brother killed him.
LAYER 8: HIDDEN AGENDA: To take revenge on his brother, Eldore (Terra).
LAYER 9: WEAKNESS: Whyller’s love for O’ller.
REED
SURFACE: His father, Mo, wants him to stop Rain from changing the rule. He also wants to make Rain pay for betraying him.
LAYER 1: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: Mo is his father.
LAYER 2: WEAKNESS: He can’t stand up to his father/say “No” to his father.
LAYER 3: CONSPIRACIES: He put his best friend, Toto, close to his father to sabotage his father’s plans that may harm Rain.
LAYER 4: DECEPTION: Everyone believes he’s hunting Rain to make her pay for lying to him,
but he’s actually helping Rain change the rule.
LAYER 5: MORAL ISSUE: Violating their family value.
LAYER 6: SECRET IDENTITY: Reed the Great Pretender.
LAYER 7: WOUND: His father wants him to be someone great.
LAYER 8: HIDDEN AGENDA: To be his own person.
MO
SURFACE: He’s the Head of Sparrow Agency doing his duty.
LAYER 1: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: He’s Terra’s best friend.
LAYER 2: CONSPIRACIES: He’s conspiring with Kins and teachers to take over Terra’s position.
LAYER 3: SECRET IDENTITY: Mo Dune the Head of Affinity Academy.
LAYER 4: MORAL ISSUE: Executes anyone who breaks the rule without trial.
LAYER 5: WOUND: His passed on teacher gave his rightful position to Terra.
LAYER 6: WEAKNESS: His son, Reed.
LAYER 7: SECRET: He abandoned the woman he loved with unborn child to be with
Reed’s mother, Lynn.
LAYER 8: DECEPTION: Everyone believes he wants to stop Rain from changing the rule, but he’s forcing Rain to change the rule as part of his plan to become the leader of the underworld of magic.
LAYER 9: HIDDEN AGENDA: To make his family the most powerful family.
TERRA
SURFACE: He’s Rain’s adopted father and secretly helped her break the rule to enter Affinity Academy.
LAYER 1: CONSPIRACIES: With Rain, for Rain to disguise as a pretty girl and enter Affinity Academy to learn magic. With Rain, to change the rule of teaching magic to pretty ones. With Kins, for Kins to spy on Mo. With Anna and Shard Spear, to test Rain. With Eucher and Rain’s mother, O’ller, to curse and abandon new born baby Rain.
LAYER 2: SECRET IDENTITY: Eldore, Celestial, Skai Ruse, Old Beggar and many others as Head of Affinity Academy.
LAYER 3: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: Rain is his daughter with O’ller. Whyller is his brother he killed 800 years ago. O’ller is his brother’s wife. He’s the Celestial who create this world to comprehend his magic (People and creatures of this world).
LAYER 4: MORAL ISSUE: Readily commits unethical acts.
LAYER 5: DECEPTION: He lied to Rain that he’s changing the rule to fulfill his passed on teacher’s wishes when he’s changing the rule to find his brother Whyller. He created a rift in the sky to make people believe that their world is dying and only teaching magic to pretty ones will repair it.
LAYER 6: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To find his brother to save his life. To comprehend the magic.
LAYER 7: WOUND: Being held in contempt.
LAYER 8: MYSTERY: He introduced the rule of teaching magic to pretty ones 800 years ago to increase his magical powers.
LAYER 9: SECRETS: His soul is on the verge of shattering. He killed his brother Whyller.
LAYER 10: WEAKNESS: His love for O’ller.
CHARACTER TO UPGRADE TO MAIN CHARACTER POSSIBLE REVEAL SEQUENCE
O’LLER
SURFACE: She’s conspiring with her daughter, Aloe.
LAYER 1: CONSPIRACIES: With Terra, to curse and abandon newborn baby, Rain. With Aloe, to protect Rain. With Aloe’s mother, to train her secret army to fight Terra. With Aloe’s mother, to fake Aloe and her mother’s death in childbirth, and to adopt Aloe.
LAYER: WEAKNESS: Her daughter, Rain.
LAYER 2: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To protect Rain. To seek revenge for her husband.
LAYER 3: SECRETS: Aloe is her adopted daughter and Terra’s daughter. She used a dangerous spell to delay Rain’s growth in her womb for 800 years. Rain is actually her child with Whyller. She will never have children because of the spell she used to delay Rain’s growth. She married her enemy, Terra, to save her child, Rain – the spell was killing her with the child.
LAYER 4: DECEPTION: She conspired with Terra to find husband Whyller. She adopted Aloe as a leverage.
LAYER 5: SECRET IDENTITY: The flower.
LAYER 6: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: Whyller is her husband and Terra is Whyller’s brother.
LAYER 7: WOUND: Terra killed her husband.
LAYER 8: MORAL ISSUE: She uses spells with great price without second thoughts.
SUPPORT CHARACTERS POSSIBLE REVEAL SEQUENCE
ALOE
SURFACE: She’s conspiring with O’ller to carry out covert mission in Affinity Academy.
LAYER 1: SECRET: In love with Rain.
LAYER 2: CONSPIRACIES: With her mother, to kill O’ller and her daughter Rain.
LAYER 3: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To have her mother’s back. To kill Rain.
LAYER 4: DECEPTION: She’s using her mission to protect Rain to get close to her.
LAYAR 5: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: She’s Terra’s daughter, Rain’s cousin, and Whyller’s niece.
ALOE’S MOTHER
SURFACE: She’s helping O’ller train a secret army to bring down Terra.
LAYER 1: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: She’s O’ller’s friend and Terra’s righthand woman.
LAYER 2: CONSPIRACY: With O’ller, to fake Aloe and her death in childbirth.
With Aloe, to kill O’ller and her daughter.
LAYER 3: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To kill O’ller and Rain. To be with Terra.
LAYER 4: DECEPTION: She lied to O’ller that she doesn’t approve of Terra using her
daughter for his own selfish motive to gain her trust.
LAYER 5: SECRET: In love with Terra.
TOTO
SURFACE: He’s Aloe and Reed’s best friend working hard to learn magic and challenging
people stronger than him.
LAYER 1: CONSPIRACY: With Reed, to sabotage Mo’s plan that may harm Rain.
LAYER 2: DECEPTION: He’s using the chance to spy on Mo to discover his weaknesses.
LAYER 3: WOUND: Mo abandoned him and his mother.
LAYER 4: SECRET: He’s Mo’s illegitimate child.
LAYER 5: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To return Mo to his mother’s side.
TOTO’S MOTHER
SURFACE: A depressed woman.
LAYER 1: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: Mo and Toto’s mother were in love.
LAYER 2: WOUND: The man she loved, Mo, abandoned her with a child for another woman, Lynn.
LAYER 3: DECEPTION: She fake depression to make Toto seek revenge.
LAYER 4: HIDDEN AGENDAS: To kill Lynn and Mo.
LAYER 5: SECRET: Lynn and Mo’s father wanted her gone.
LYNN
SURFACE: A loving mother and wife.
LAYER 1: WOUND: Taking another person’s life.
LAYER 2: SECRET: She left Toto’s mother for dead.
LAYER 3: CONSPIRACY: With Mo’s father, to kill Toto’s mother.
KINS
SURFACE: He’s a teacher in Affinity Academy conspiring with Mo to take over Terra’s position.
LAYER 1: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: He’s Terra’s subordinate.
LAYER 2: CONSPIRACY: With Terra, to take over Affinity Academy.
LAYER 3: HIDDEN AGENDAS: Wants Terra to recognize his loyalty.
SHARD SPEAR
SURFACE: Terra’s subordinate with the mission to protect Rain.
LAYER 1: SECRET: In love with Aloe.
LAYER 2: CONSPIRACY: With Terra, to find Whyller.
LAYER 3: RELATIONSHIP HISTORY: He was Whyller’s subordinate and betrayed Whyller.
LAYER 4: HIDDEN AGENDAS: Wants Whyller to take him back.
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What I learned doing this assignment is not just open loops can create the need to watch next episode, but also they can be used as cliffhangers. I also learned that some Big Picture Open Loops for my season one came to me quickly while others… I will have to discover them over time.
ASSIGNMENT 1
1. Think about your Example Show. Make a list of the Big Picture open loops that were established early in the season.
BIG PICTURE OPEN LOOPS – PRISON BREAK
– Can Michael survive in the prison?
– Will Michael break his brother out of the prison?
– Will Michael and Sara be together?
– Will Lincoln and Veronica get back together?
– Will Veronica and Nick find evidences to exonerate Lincoln?
– Will Lincoln get executed?
– Will Michael get caught?
– Will Veronica and Nick discover who setup Lincoln?
– Will Sara discover Michael is using her?
– Will Veronica and Nick get killed by those who setup Lincoln?
– Will LJ get killed by Kellerman?
2. Watch the next episode and see how those open loops are being used to create the need to see future episodes.
ASSIGNMENT 2:
1. Use this list to brainstorm big picture open loops for your first season that you will use to keep the audience captivated.
GOALS:
New goals?
– Rain must find a way to lift the curse.
– Rain joins Terra to change the rule.
Goals related to the big picture?
– Rain must find a way to learn magic.
Crushed goals?
– Rain can’t learn magic.
Competition / conflict around goals?
– Rain is ugly and magic is taught to pretty ones.
CONSEQUENCES:
Are they going to be caught?
– Rain gets caught for breaking the rule.
Problems created from past actions?
– Rain faces execution for breaking the rule.
– Mo becomes too cruel to Rain for Reed disobeyed him because of her.
– Mo confines Reed for disobeying him.
Good plans gone wrong?.
– Rain uses disguise to enter Affinity Academy.
SOLVING PROBLEMS:
What is the major problem for this character?
– Rain is ugly.
– Reed’s father, Mo, wants Reed to learn magic and follow
in the footsteps of his ancestors.
– Terra holds Mo’s rightful position.
– Zin suspects Mo is conspiring to take over Terra’s position.
What are they trying to solve?
– Rain wants to enter Affinity Academy.
– Rain wants to prove her birth father wrong.
– Rain wants to lift the curse.
– Reed wants his father to let him do what he wants.
– Mo wants to take back his position from Terra.
– Zin wants to find evidences of Mo’s conspiracy to take over
Terra’s position.
Major change imposed on character?
– Rain must learn magic.
Previous solutions cause new problems?
– Rain uses disguise to learn magic, but the disguise will cause her demise.
RELATIONSHIPS:
Relationships in peril?
– Mo and Terra. Mo wants to take over Terra’s position.
New relationships forming?
– Rain falls for both Reed and Aloe.
– Reed and Aloe both fall for Rain.
Conflict inside relationships?
– Mo disapproves of Reed hanging out with Rain. Rain is a distraction.
– Zin wants to bust Mo.
– Aloe is jealous that Rain loves Reed.
– Aloe wants Reed to save their friend, Rain.
Relationships changing?
Mo and Terra.
DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS:
Can they survive X?
– Can Rain survive the underworld of magic?
Putting themselves in danger / making dangerous decisions?
– Rain puts on the disguise that is slowly killing her.
– Rain joins Terra to change the rule.
– Aloe joins Terra to rescue Rain from the prison.
– Terra sends Shard and his men to rescue Rain from the prison.
– Aloe sneaks out of Affinity Academy to find Rain’s mother, O’ller,
and come up with a way to save Rain from execution.
Who else is pulled into their danger?
– Reed and Aloe.
Internal dangers (drug addiction, need for medicine, inner demons)?
– The disguise Rain’s wearing is slowly eating away her life force.
2. Tell us your top 5-8 Big Picture Open Loops that could be in your pilot.
MY PILOT BIG PICTURE OPEN LOOPS
– Can Rain survive the underworld of magic?
– Will Rain learn magic?
– Will Rain get caught?
– Will Rain die from the disguise?
– Will Rain change the rule?
– Will Mo take over Terra’s position?
– Will Mo get caught?
– What will Terra do to Mo for conspiring to take over his position?
– What will become of Terra and Mo’s relationship?
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Subject line: Ben’s Show Mysteries
What I learned doing this assignment is I worried about the things I shouldn’t right now. I thought of coming up with mystery type 1 that wouldn’t be a cliché or use as a teaser, or can be answered through out the entire season when I should focus solely on creating mysteries. I also had difficulty with using Hal’s way of creating cover up versus the cover up I had come up with for my show, creating more layers. But I have realized I shouldn’t worry about any of that and create mysteries, which is what Hal wanted me to do.
ASSIGNMENT 1:
Watch the next episode of your Example Show and focus on the mysteries that have been created in that show. Also, notice the difference between the big picture mysteries that are a big part of the plot across the entire season versus the smaller mysteries.
Tell us about the mysteries from this show.
MYSTERY TYPE 1: WHAT HAPPENED THAT CUASED MICHAEL TO ROB A BANK JUST TO GET CAUGHT.
A. Shocking Event: Michael robs the bank just to get caught.
B. Secret: Michael’s brother, Lincoln, is setup and on a death row.
C. Investigation: Veronica and Nick are investigating to uncover who setup Lincoln.
WHO: Michael.
WHAT: Robbing a bank.
WHEN: Happening now.
WHERE: Savings Bank.
WHY: Michael wants to go to prison to break out his brother.
HOW: Michael tattooed the plan on his entire body.
PART WITHHELD:
Everything is revealed by the end of the pilot. This and the way the writers deal with mysteries in The 100 helped me come to a decision when I was making things difficult for myself.
MYSTERY TYPE 2: WHO KILLED THE VICE PRESIDENT’S BROTHER AND WHY.
A. Cover up: Lincoln killed the Vice President’s brother.
B. Secret: Who set Lincoln up and why?
C. Reveals: In a flashback, Lincoln swore to Michael that he didn’t kill the Vice President’s
brother. And that he was setup. Michael himself did his own investigation, but it led to nowhere.
WHAT: Lincoln killed the Vice President’s brother.
WHEN: Three years ago.
WHERE: In the garage.
WHY: Lincoln has a grudge with the Vice President’s brother.
HOW: Lincoln shot the Vice President’s brother in his car.
PART WITHHELD:
WHO: Who setup Lincoln and why?
SMALLER MYSTERIES
Sue Parsons, woman pretending to be a reporter, visits Lincoln in the prison and threatens him with his son’s life.
Michael and Lincoln’s father abandoned them.
Charles Westmoreland finds his Cat dead in his cell.
The person who stole the evidence tape Veronica hid new exactly where to find it when only Veronica and Nick knew where she hid it.
Veronica and LJ’s mother have past relationship with Lincoln.
ASSIGNMENT 2:
Create two mysteries for your show — one that shows up strong in the Pilot and the other that is revealed over time.
1. Create your Shocking Event Mystery and tell us the WWWWW and H, along with the part withheld.
MYSTERY TYPE 1: RIFT IN THE SKY
A. Shocking Event: A rift appears in the sky, sucking the land and everything into it.
B. Secret: Terra created the rift to deceive people that their world is dying and
teaching magic to pretty ones will repair the rift.
C. Investigation: Audiences have been set up to investigate what the rift is.
WHAT: A rift held by giant chains and sucking light.
WHERE: In the sky.
PARTS WITHHELD:
WHO: Eldore (Terra) created the rift.
WHEN: Created a day ago.
WHY: To deceive people that their world is dying and teaching magic to pretty ones
will repair the rift
HOW: To hide the truth.
2. Create the Over Time Mystery and tell us the WWWWW and H, along with the part withheld.
MYSTERY TYPE 2: MAGIC IS TAUGHT TO PRETTY ONES
A. Cover up: Terra created the rift to deceive people that their world is dying and
teaching magic to pretty ones will repair the rift.
B. Secret: Terra is harnessing pretty ones magic to increase his magical powers.
C. Reveals: Rain finds her birth father, Eucher, and discovers that Eucher abandoned her
because she’s ugly to learn magic and bring pride to the family. Later, when Rain decides
to learn magic and wants her adopted father’s help. He refuses because there is a rule that
magic is taught to pretty ones and she will get executed.
WHO: Skai Ruse (Terra) introduced the rule.
WHEN: Introduced 800 years ago.
WHERE: Affinity Academy.
PART WITHHELD:
WHAT: To increase Terra’s magical powers.
WHY: Terra wants to become the most powerful sorcerer in the world.
HOW: Terra harnesses the magic with Mystic Mountain Affinity Academy sits on and convert it into his own power.
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Subject line: Ben’s Show Empathy/Distress
What I learned doing this assignment is I tried to list empathy/Distress that only involve main
characters and leave out support characters.
ASSIGNMENT 1:
1. Watch the next episode of your Example Show and focus on the Empathy/Distress that shows up in this
episode and throughout the season so far.
– T-Bag killed a CO to silent him.
– Inmates try to take Sara’s life.
– Abruzzi cuts off Michael’s toes when he refused to tell whereabouts of Fibonacci.
– T-Bag wants Michael’s life to avenge his man he believes Michael killed.
– The people who set up Lincoln sent someone in the prison to take Lincoln’s life.
– Veronica and Nick follow a lead to Washington, but someone threatens to take their lives.
– Michael breaks the law.
– Michael goes to prison to break his brother.
ASSIGNMENT 2:
1. Make a list of BIG PICTURE difficult situations and decisions your characters could make because of
the main conflict of this series.
Just ask: “Knowing the concept, what are the big picture Empathy/Distress situations that could occur?”
A. Undeserved misfortune.
– Rain’s birth father abandoned her when she was a new born baby.
– Terra cursed Rain while she was unborn to make her ugly.
– Rain’s slowly dying from disguise she’s wearing.
– Whyller’s brother killed him.
– Whyller’s soul is about to dissipate.
B. External Character conflicts.
– Mo puts Reed in charge of stopping Rain from changing the rule.
– Mo tortures Rain to find out who conspired with her to break the rule.
– Reed captures Aloe to force Rain to give herself up.
– Mo pressures Reed to stop Rain at all costs.
– Terra pressures Rain to kill Reed.
– Reed is relentless in his pretend pursuit to make Rain pay for betraying him.
– Aloe disapproves of Rain seeking revenge.
– Toto takes Reed hostage to force Mo to divorce his wife and marry his mother.
– O’ller hates Whyller when she discovered Whyller killed their daughter, Rain.
C. Plot intruding on life.
– Mo finds out Reed is secretly helping Rain change the rule.
– Rain gets exposed, caught, and locked up to be executed.
– Reed hunts down Rain to stop her from changing the rule.
– Mo leads the underworld of magic to crush Rain and her average and ugly people.
– Terra discovers Rain is his brother and captures her.
– Rain discovers Terra plan to harness the magic of their world.
– Rain discovers she’s cursed to never learn magic.
– Rain falls for Aloe and Rain.
– Reed and Aloe fall for Rain.
D. Moral dilemmas.
– Reed goes up against the woman he loves or violates their family value by disobeying his father.
– Rain kills the man she loves (Reed) or Reed kills Rain to prevent her from changing the rule.
– Rain refuses to save Terra’s life or watches Terra kill Aloe and Reed.
– Rain gives herself up to save Aloe or Reed kills Aloe.
– Mo and the underworld of magic refuse to work with Rain to stop Terra or Terra destroys their world.
E. Forced decisions they’d never make.
– Rain decides to learn magic to prove her birth father wrong.
– Rain breaks the rule of teaching magic to pretty ones.
– Rain decides to change the rule when her cover is blown.
– Rain recruits average and ugly people to go up against Affinity Academy.
– Rain goes ahead with the disguise that will lead to her demise.
– Mo reveals the mystery of teaching magic to pretty ones to the underworld of magic to unit them and
crush Rain and her average and ugly people.
– Reed leads Sparrow agents to stop Rain.
– Rain makes a deal with the Lord of Shadow Warriors to defeat Mo and his Great Alliance.
– Rain reveals who Terra really is and the real mystery behind teaching magic to pretty ones.
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Subject line: Ben’s show Relationship Map
I couldn’t upload pdf file. So I copied and paste and everything is all jumbled. Not going to fix it because it’s a pain to do.
What I learned doing this assignment is many things and one of them is to always know that any relationships can have many things underneath that make them interesting. If nothing is there, I have to find something.
Assignment 1 – Example Show: Prison Break
SURFACE
Michael and Abruzzi: Inmates
Michael and Sucre: Inmates
Michael and Sara: Doctor/Patient
COMMON GROUND
Michael and Abruzzi: Inmates, break out of the prison.
Michael and Sucre: Cellmates, inmates, break out of the prison.
Michael and Sara: Their fathers have done bad things.
CONFLICT
Michael and Abruzzi: Scofield holds the information Abruzzi needs to find Fibonacci.
Michael and Sucre: Scofield set up Sucre to find out if he can trust him.
HISTORY
Michael and Abruzzi: Met at the prison.
Michael and Sucre: Met as cellmates in the prison.
Michael and Sara: Sara works in the prison as a doctor.
SUBTEXT
Michael and Abruzzi: Conspiring to break out of the prison. Michael has the plan tattooed on his body.
Michael and Sucre: Conspiring to break out of the prison. Michael has the plan tattooed on his body.
Michael and Sara: Michael is planning to break his brother out of the prison. Michael has the plan tattooed on his body.
Relationship Arc
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Assignment 2 – My TV Show
SURFACE
Rain and Terra: Adopted father and daughter
Rain and Reed: Love interest.
Rain and Mo: Teacher and student
Rain and Aloe: Love interest.
Rain and Shard: Rain’s protector
Rain and O’ller: Mother and daughter
COMMON GROUND
Rain and Terra: Change the rule. School. Parents.
Rain and Reed: School. Students. Change the rule. In love.
Rain and Mo: School. Care for Reed.
Rain and Aloe: School. Students. In love. Care for O’ller.
Rain and Shard: Change the rule.
Rain and O’ller: Common enemy. Marriage with Whyller.
Conflict
Terra betrayed and killed Whyller.
Rain betrayed Reed.
Rain wants to change the rule.
Rain is a distraction to Reed.
Aloe disapproves of Rain seeking revenge.
Shard betrayed Whyller.
O’ller married Whyller’s enemy.
History
Parents with Whyller.
Join same school.
Father.
O’ller sent Aloe to protect Rain.
Whyller found Shard homeless.
Arranged Marriage.
Subtext
Terra is using Rain to find his brother.
Rain is Terra’s brother.
Whyller knows Terra cursed Rain.
Terra conspired with O’ller to curse and abandon Rain.
Rain is an ugly girl disguised as a pretty girl.
Rain’s not the woman Reed thinks she is.
Reed is secretly helping Rain change the rule.
Rain broke the rule.
Aloe knows Rain is O’ller’s daughter.
Rain is Aloe’s cousin.
Whyller is Aloe’s uncle.
Shard was Whyller’s subordinate.
Whyller knows Shard conspired with Terra to test Rain.
Husband and wife.
Rain is Whyller.
Rain was Whyller’s
daughter.
O’ller conspired with Terra to cursed and abandon Rain.
Whyller is in love with Aloe.
Relationship Arc
From brothers to enemies.
From not knowing each other to family.
From not knowing each other to enemies.
From not knowing each other to family.
From betraying Whyller to redeeming himself.
From husband and wife to being separated by death – Whyller dies.
TERRA
MO
SHARD
O’LLER
Surface
Best friends
Lord and subordinate
Wife
Common Ground
School.
Teacher.
To find Whyller.
To find Whyller.
Town.
Conflict
Mo wants to take over Terra’s position.
Terra takes Reed hostage.
Terra tricked Shard into betraying Whyller.
Shard wants to help Whyller stop Terra.
Terra wants to kill Whyller.
History
They met through their teacher.
Shard was Whyller’s subordinate.
Whyller introduced O’ller to Terra.
Subtext
Terra conspired with Kins to make Kins the head of Affinity Academy.
Terra conspired with Rain to change the rule.
Shard is looking for Whyller to join him.
Rain isn’t Terra’s daughter, but Whyller’s.
O’ller doesn’t know Terra is dying.
O’ller is gathering an army in secret to fight Terra.
Terra conspired with Rain to disguise as a pretty girl.
Aloe is Terra’s daughter and her mother is alive.
Relationship arc
From best friends to enemies.
From lord and subordinate to enemies.
From husband and wife to enemies.
REED
MO
TOTO
ALOE
Surface
Father and son
Best friends
Best friends.
Common Ground
Family.
School.
Common enemy.
School.
Aloe’s friends.
City.
Toto’s friends.
Their mothers are friends.
City.
In love with Rain.
Conflict
Mo wants Rain dead.
Mo thinks Rain is distracting Reed from becoming a great person.
Reed is Mo’s son.
Jealousy.
Aloe is helping Rain change the rule.
History
Father.
Aloe introduced Toto to Reed.
Met through their mothers.
Subtext
Reed is secretly helping Rain change the rule.
Reed conspired with Toto to sabotage his father’s plan that may harm Rain.
Mo is using Reed to push Rain to change the rule to realize his goal.
Reed is violating their family value.
Reed wants to become his own person.
Toto is Mo’s illegitimate child.
Aloe became friend with Reed because of his father.
Relationship arc
Same.
From best friends to brothers.
From best friends to family.
MO
NATCHE
KINS
ZIN
TOTO
Surface
Mo is Natchez’s superior.
Conspirators.
Enemies.
Toto is Reed’s Friend.
Common Ground
School.
Agency.
Punish those who break the rule.
Teachers.
School.
Teachers.
School.
Common enemy.
School.
Conflict
Natchez disapproves of Reed leading them.
Head of the Affinity Academy position.
Mo is plotting to replace Terra.
Mo abandoned his mother with unborn child for Reed’s mother.
History
Natchez was recruited to join Sparrow Agency for his skills.
Terra introduced Kins to Mo.
They met at Affinity Academy.
Reed introduced Toto to Mo.
Subtext
Being under younger person hurts Natchez’s pride.
Kins is conspiring with Terra to become head of Affinity Academy.
Kins is spying on Mo.
Zin is investigating Mo.
Toto is Mo’s illegitimate child.
Toto wants to return Mo to his mother’s side.
Relationship arc
Same.
From conspirators to enemies.
From enemies to friends.
From not knowing each other to father and son.
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Subject line: Ben’s Character Emotions
What I learned doing this assignment is I have spent a lot of time trying to figure out
the answers to the questions I can’t come up with instead of letting my creative processes
do its work. So I’ll leave them the way they are and post the assignments.
ASSIGNMENT 1: Example Show
Watch the next episode of your Example Show and create an Emotional Profile for two or three main characters in this show.
MICHAEL SCOFIELD
A. Situational: Hope: To break his brother out of the prison.
Fear: Getting caught/Unable to save his brother.
B. Motivation: Want: To save his brother from execution.
Need: To be with someone.
C. Mask: Base Negative Emotion: Afraid / Public Mask: Brave
D. Weaknesses: Weak.
E. Triggers: Being abandoned.
F. Coping Mechanism: Comes up with a solution.
LINCOLN BURROWS
A. Situational: Hope: His brother will save his life.
Fear: Getting executed/Dying.
B. Motivation: Want: To live.
Need: To find who set him up.
C. Mask: Base Negative Emotion:???/ Public Mask:???
D. Weaknesses???
E. Triggers: When nobody believes him.
F. Coping Mechanism: Anger.
ASSIGNMENT 2: Your Show
1. For each of your main characters, brainstorm an Emotional Profile, filling in the following:
RAIN
A. Situational: Hope: To exact revenge on his brother.
Fear: He’ll never get his revenge/Dying first.
B. Motivation: Want: To defeat his brother. / Need: Redemption
C. Mask: Base Negative Emotion??? / Public Mask???
D. Weaknesses: His love for his brother.
E. Triggers: Betrayed by family.
F. Coping Mechanism: Seclusion.
REED
A. Situational: Hope: To be his own person.
Fear: His father will never let him be his own person.
B. Motivation: Want: To change his father. / Need:???
C. Mask: Base Negative Emotion: Rebellious??? / Public Mask: Obedient son.
D. Weaknesses: He can’t stand up to his father.
E. Triggers: Telling him what he can and can’t do.
F. Coping Mechanism: Pretend, go along with it.
MO
A. Situational: Hope: To make his family the most powerful family.
Fear: He may not accomplish it.
B. Motivation: Want: To fulfil a promise. / Need:???
C. Mask: Base Negative Emotion??? / Public Mask???
D. Weaknesses: Must succeed, his son.
E. Triggers: Failure, being defied.
F. Coping Mechanism: Uncompromising, problem solving.
TERRA
A. Situational: Hope: To find his brother to save his life.
Fear: His brother will not save him.
B. Motivation: Want: To become the most powerful sorcerer in the world.
Need: Control.
C. Mask: Base Negative Emotion ??? / Public Mask: ???
D. Weaknesses: Greed for power.
E. Triggers: Being held in contempt, interfering with his plan.
F. Coping Mechanism: Merciless, threats.
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Subject line: Ben’s Intriguing Character Layers
What I learned doing this assignment is I come up with answers for any character without considering whether they are bad or good characters because good characters can do bad things for their own gain.
ASSIGNMENT 2
1. For your Inner Circle characters, fill in any of the Intrigue items that apply.
Character Name: Rain
Role: An ugly beggar girl abandoned by her birth father (Eucher), Reed’s love interest,
O’ller’s daughter, and Terra’s adopted daughter.
Hidden agendas: To take revenge on his brother, Eldore (Terra).
Competition: His brother Eldore (Terra) is also in love with O’ller.
Conspiracies: With Terra, for Rain to disguise as a pretty girl and enter Affinity Academy
to learn magic. With Terra, to change the rule of teaching magic to pretty ones.
Secrets: She’s not really Rain, but Whyller. Whyller killed Rain to take over her body.
He has also killed and forcefully taken over other people’s bodies for a thousand years. He knows Terra cursed Rain.
Deception: Old Beggar (Terra) believes Rain (Whyller) is going to Affinity Academy to learn
magic, but Whyller is going there to discover conspiracy in cursing Rain. Everyone believes
Rain is recruiting ugly and average people to change the rule, but she (Whyller) is actually
turning them into his army to fight his brother.
Wound: Betrayed by family.
Secret Identity: White Phoenix, Whyller.
Character Name: Reed Dune
Role: Son of Mo Dune, Aloe and Toto’s best friend, and Rain’s love interest.
Hidden agendas: To change his rigid father and be with the woman he loves.
Competition: Aloe is secretly in love with Rain.
Conspiracies: He put his best friend, Toto, close to his father to sabotage
his father’s plans that may harm Rain.
Secrets: He’s violating their family value, which is also very important to him.
Deception: Everyone believes he’s hunting Rain to make her pay for lying to him,
but he’s actually helping Rain change the rule.
Wound: Lied to by the woman he loves. ???
Secret Identity: Reed the Great Pretender.
Character Name: Mo Dune
Role: Head of Sparrow Agency within Affinity Academy, Reed’s father, and Terra’s
best friend.
Hidden agendas: To take back his position from Terra and become the leader of
the underworld of magic.
Competition: Terra holds his position.
Conspiracies: With Kins and teachers to take over Terra’s position.
Secrets: He abandoned the woman he loved with unborn child to be with
Reed’s mother, Lynn, for power.
Deception: Everyone believes he wants to stop Rain from changing the rule, but he’s
forcing Rain to change the rule as part of his plan to become the leader of
the underworld of magic.
Wound: Their passed on teacher gave his rightful position to Terra. ???
Secret Identity: Head Mo Dune.
Character Name: Terra
Role: Head of Affinity Academy, Mo’s best friend, and Rain’s adopted father.
Hidden agendas: To find his brother to save his life. To become the most powerful sorcerer.
Competition: Mo Dune wants his position.
Conspiracies: With Rain, for Rain to disguise as a pretty girl and enter Affinity Academy
to learn magic. With Rain to change the rule of teaching magic to pretty ones. With Kins, for
Kins to spy on Mo. With Anna and Shard Spear to test Rain. With Eucher and Rain’s mother, O’ller, to curse and abandon new born baby Rain.
Secrets: He came up with the mystery of teaching magic to pretty ones to increase his magical powers. He killed his brother, Whyller.
Deception: He lied to Rain that he’s changing the rule to fulfill his passed on teacher’s
wishes when he’s changing the rule to lure his brother Whyller.
Wound: Being held in contempt.
Secret Identity: Eldore, Skai Ruse, Old Beggar and many others as Head of Affinity Academy.
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Subject line: Ben’s Intriguing Character Layers
What I learned doing this assignment is I haven’t seen much of Character Intrigue being used in my example show. Maybe they will show up in later episodes or next seasons. Or it simply means that my character/s doesn’t/don’t need to have all Character Intrigue to make them interesting. If I can come up with all of them, good. If not, a few will suffice.
ASSIGNMENT 1:
1. Think about your Example Show. Make a list of the places you’ve already seen Character Intrigue in the previous episodes.
Character name: Michael Scofield
Role: A structural engineer and Lincoln’s brother.
Hidden agendas: To break out his brother from the prison.
Competition: ?
Conspiracies: With Lincoln, Abruzzi, and Sucre to break out of the prison.
Secrets: He’s planning to break his brother out of the prison.
Deception: He lies about being diabetic.
Wound: ?
Secret Identity: Fish.
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Subject line: Ben’s Engaging Main Characters
What I learned doing this assignment is having characters that are not engaging
make them dull and dull characters will cause the audiences to lose interest and
that will cause the show to get cancelled or even get made in the first place.
So engaging characters are just as important in a great show.
ASSIGNMENT 1:
Watch the next episode of your Example Show to see any places the lead characters might fit this model.
Tell us the name and Engaging Profile answers for at least one character from your example show.
MICHAEL SCOFIELD
A. Role in the show: A structural engineer and Lincoln Burrows’ brother.
B. Unique Purpose: To break his wrongly accused brother out of prison.
C. Intrigue: What is secret beneath the surface?
He’s planning to break out his brother, Lincoln.
D. Moral Issue: What moral boundaries are they crossing?
He set up his cellmate, Sucre, with a fake phone causing him to lose his conjugal.
E. Unpredictable: What will they do next?
When Michael discovered investigating his brother’s innocent will lead nowhere and Lincoln
has two months to live, he decided to install himself in the prison to break out his brother.
F. Empathetic: Why do we care?
John Abruzzi cut off his toe when he refused to tell him whereabouts of Fibonacci.
ASSIGNMENT 2:
Now, do the process with your show.
1. Tell us the journey of your show.
Rain goes from being an ugly beggar girl abandoned by her birth father to
entering Affinity Academy to learn magic and joining Terra to change the rule
of teaching magic to pretty ones only.
2. Who are the main characters that will sell your show?
Rain, Reed Dune, Mo Dune, and Terra.
3. Answer these questions for each of those characters.
RAIN
A. Role in the show: An ugly beggar girl abandoned by her family.
O’ller’s daughter and Terra’s adopted daughter.
B. Unique Purpose: To learn magic and prove her birth father wrong.
C. Intrigue: What is secret beneath the surface?
She’s not really Rain, but Whyller that has taken over Rain’s body.
D. Moral Issue: What moral boundaries are they crossing?
Killing and forcefully taking over others’ bodies.
E. Unpredictable: What will they do next?
Brutal and vicious.
F. Empathetic: Why do we care?
She enters Affinity Academy to learn magic and prove her birth father
wrong while slowly dying from disguise she’s wearing.
REED
A. Role in the show: Mo’s son and Rain’s love interest.
B. Unique Purpose: To change his rigid father and be with the woman he loves.
C. Intrigue: What is secret beneath the surface?
He’s secretly helping Rain to change the rule of teaching magic to pretty ones only.
D. Moral Issue: What moral boundaries are they crossing?
Breaks their family value – Obedience.
E. Unpredictable: What will they do next?
Prideful, Unforgiving.
F. Empathetic: Why do we care?
His father is pressuring him.
MO
A. Role in the show: Head of Sparrow Agency and Terra’s best friend.
B. Unique Purpose: To take back his position from Terra and become
the leader of the underworld of magic.
C. Intrigue: What is secret beneath the surface?
He has illegitimate son.
D. Moral Issue: What moral boundaries are they crossing?
Will execute anyone who breaks the rule without trial.
E. Unpredictable: What will they do next?
Uncompromising, Ruthless
F. Empathetic: Why do we care?
Their passed on teacher gave his rightful position to Terra.
TERRA
A. Role in the show: Head of Affinity Academy and Rain’s adopted father.
B. Unique Purpose / Expertise: A strategist who wants to find his brother
to save his life.
C. Intrigue: What is secret beneath the surface?
He introduced the rule of teaching magic to pretty ones to increase his
magical powers.
D. Moral Issue: What moral boundaries are they crossing?
He cursed an unborn child to make it ugly, Readily commits unethical acts.
E. Unpredictable: What will they do next?
Manipulative, Merciless
F. Empathetic: Why do we care?
Mo is conspiring with teachers to take over his position.
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Subject line: Ben’s Three Circles of Characters
What I learned doing this assignment is I will not need to come up with characters
when I start writing because I have already done that. And I also know where each one of
them belongs. Though I may come up with some characters in future, they will not be
the main characters. This will save me a lot of work when I start working on my script.
ASSIGNMENT 1:
Watch the next episode of your Example Show to see how the characters fit into these three circles:
Give us a quick list for each circle.
A. Main Characters Circle: Michael Scofield, Lincoln Burrows, Veronica Donovan, John Abruzzi.
B. Connected Circle: Lisa, LJ, T-Bag, Hale, Kellerman, Sucre, Bellick, Sara Tancredi, C-Note.
C. Environment Circle: Tattoo Artist (Sid), Inmates, Prison guards, Warden Pope, Judge, Sebastian, Brian, Smallhouse, Maggio, DB Cooper, Tim Giles, Philly Falzone, Hector, Maricruz, Ms. Simmons, Tsili, Wendy, Leticia Barris.
ASSIGNMENT 2:
1. Create the three circles of characters for your show.
A. Main Characters Circle: Rain, Reed Dune, Mo Dune, Terra.
B. Connected Circle: Aloe, O’ller, Eucher, Shard Spear, Garth Natche, Kins, Zin, Toto,
Lynn, Aloe’s mother, Anna.
C. Environment Circle: Sparrow agents, Beggars, Teachers, Shadow Ones, Array, Jitt,
Strange Sorceror, Midwife, Woman, Anna’s boys, Doctor, Students, Risa, Tavern owner,
Authority man, Guads, Parents, ugly and average children, Pretty children, Grocery man.
2. Give us a one sentence description of each of the Main Characters.
RAIN
An ugly 15-yr-old beggar girl determined to learn magic and prove
her birth father wrong.
REED DUNE
A submissive and obedient 15-yr-old son who wants to change his rigid father and
be with the woman he loves.
MO DUNE
An ambitious head of Sparrow Agency who wants more than to take back his rightful
position from Terra, but to become the leader of the underworld of magic.
TERRA
A manipulative Head of Affinity Academy who will stop at nothing to become the most
powerful sorcerer in the world.
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Subject line: Ben's Prison Break - 5 Star Model What I learned doing this assignment is that 5 star points are very important in binge TV. They hook audiences and make them obsess they follow the show to the end. ASSIGNMENT: 1. Pick a Binge Worthy EXAMPLE SHOW from our list below and watch the first episode, making a light outline of the episode. Just the beats and anything that seems important to you. PRISON BREAK BEAT SHEET INT. TATTOO STUDIO - NIGHT Tattoo artist, Sid finishes drawing a tattoo on Michael's entire body, which took a couple of months for Michael to get it done when it takes a few years for others. Michael tells Sid he hasn't got a few years. INT. MICHAEL'S APPARTMENT - NIGHT Michael destroys newspapers he put on a glass window about Lincoln Burrows' execution, governor's daughter, Mob boss Abruzzi, D.B. Cooper and throws the hard drive in the river. INT. SAVINGS BANK - NIGHT Michael robs the bank in suit and without a mask - he deliberately wants to get caught. And he gets caught. INT. COURT ROOM - NIGHT Michael makes a plea of no contest and insists on it despite his representative, Veronica, trying to help him. His only concern is his nephew not to see what's happening or what his trying to do. INT. CELL, COURT BUILDING - NIGHT Veronica uses Michael's concern about his nephew, herself and that he's not a violent person to attempt to change Michael's mind. It doesn't work. INT. COURT ROOM - NIGHT The judge sentences Michael five years in Fox River State Penitentiary. A maximum security in Chicago to honor Michael's request to be incarcerated near his home. INT. PROCESSING AREA, PRISON - DAY Prison guard tells Michael they have two commandments and warns him not to be smart. Turns out Michael has Type I Diabetes. INT. CELL BLOCK - DAY Inmate stabs another inmate. INT. MICHAELE'S CELL - DAY Michael's cell inmate, Sucre, tells him "Welcome to prisneyland, fish." INT. VERONICA'S HOUSE - NIGHT Veronica's troubled about what happened (Michael's case). Her fiance tells Veronica she did everything she could to help Michael. But Veronica can't figure out why Michael would give up. EXT. PRISON YARD - DAY Michael checks out fire hydrants locations and tosses a magazine down the grate, which gets block by another grate in the drainage. He then asks where he can find Lincoln Burrows, who is in another area and waiting execution in a month. Lincoln can't get out unless for chapel and P.I. (Prison Industry runs by John Abruzzi). It turns out Lincoln Burrows is Michael's brother. INT. CELL - DAY Michael makes paper swan. INT. VISITATION AREA, PRISON - DAY - FLASHBACK Lincoln swears to prove that he didn't killed Vice President's brother as Michael wanted him. But Michael can't understand why everyone got it wrong. Lincoln believes someone set him up and wanted him gone quickly. INT. CELL - DAY Sucre asks Michael another word for love and tells Michael he's proposing to his girlfriend. Michael suggests "passion" after Sucre told him the context of the letter. EXT. BACK ALLEY - DAY Michael's nephew's friend, Brian, is worried and doesn't want to go through with whatever they want to do. Michael's nephew, LJ, tells him everything will be fine to ease his mind. EXT. CAR - DAY Drug distributor tells LJ what he wants. When to sell drugs and what bills he wanted. LJ knows what to do. But what LJ and his friend don't know is that cops are after them. EXT. ALLEYWAY - DAY Cops arrest LJ and his friend. EXT. PRISON COURYARD - DAY Michael asks Abruzzi to hire him at PI. Abruzzi believes Michael has nothing he needs and ignores him. Michael puts paper swan on the table and tells Abruzzi he might find he can be of more assistance than he thinks. INT. CHIAPPPETTI LAMB AND VEAL - DAY Smallhouse tosses the photo of a man Maggio recognizes as Fibonacci on the desk and thought was gone forever, but someone has found him. Maggio asks Smallhouse if someone is messing with them. Smallhouse hands Maggio an envelope he thinks Maggio will never believe the content, but Maggio doesn't know what it is. INT. INFIRMARY - DAY Sara administers an insulin shot to Michael and leaves to grab something. Michael slides paper swan down the drain. INT. SECRET SERVICE HEADQUARTERS - DAY Hale tells Kellerman everything is clear on Lincoln execution, but is worried if Bishop McMorrow, who is close to the governor, gets closer to the truth, everything will come to light. Kellerman tells Hale to arrange a visit with Bishop McMorrow and assures him that everything will be over in a month. INT. CHURCH - DAY Michael tells Lincoln he is going to break him out, but Lincoln believes it's impossible. Turns out Michael designed the prison, which makes it possible. INT. VERONICA'S HOUSE - DAY Veronica wants their wedding done right, but her fiance thinks Veronica is having a second thought and might involve someone... Veronica tells her fiance she loves him and wants to be his wife. INT. CELL, PRISON - DAY Sucre is worried that Michael helping him come up with another word for love (passion) might have scared his girlfriend and blames him. Prison guard tells Michael Warden Pope wants to him. Sucre tells Michael it is not good because no gets an audience with the Pope. INT. POPE'S OFFICE - DAY Warden Pope wonders why someone with great credentials like Michael be doing in prison. Michael lies that he took a wrong turn. Pope doesn't believe him, and also knows Michael lied about his occupation that he's unemployed when he's a structural engineer. INT. MODEL ROOM - DAY Pope asks Michael to help him build a model of Taj Mahal he's been working on as his 40th anniversary gift to his wife. In exchange, Michael will get three days off the yard to work on the model. Michael refuses and Pope threatens him. It doesn't scare Michael. INT. LJ'S HOUSE - DAY LJ's mother, Lisa, is worried LJ is going down the wrong road and wonders if it has something to do with his father. She then suggests they visit LJ's father. INT. VISITATION AREA, PRISON - DAY Veronica tries to convince Michael to stop what he's doing and that there is a better way. She got in touch with diocese and Bishop may help. Michael is sure it wouldn't stop what's happening, but delays it and wants Veronica to find out who is trying to bury Lincoln. Veronica doesn't believe Michael even if he told her the evidence was cooked. Turns out Veronica and Lincoln have past relationship. INT. BISHOP MCMORROW'S HOUSE - DAY Hale and Kellerman want Bishop McMorrow to temporarily suspend his opposition to Lincoln's death sentence, but when Bishop McMorrow refuses, Kellerman threatens to charge him of tax fraud. Bishop McMorrow stands his ground and in the end discovers that Lincoln killed Vice President's brother. EXT. PRISON YARD/EXT. MAGGIO'S OFFICE - DAY Maggio tells Abruzzi someone found Fibonacci he believes must be in witness protection on the phone. He doesn't know who the person is. Just a folded up bird made of paper in the envelope, which Abruzzi ascertains is origami. EXT. PRISON YARD - DAY Michael checks the drain. Paper swan he slipped into the drain in the infirmary has floated here and is together with the magazine he dumped in earlier. EXT. PRISON YARD - CONTINOUS Michael makes a conversation with Charles Westmoreland telling him he heard he was DB Cooper. Charles denies telling Michael he can't give him Cooper story because he isn't him. EXT. PRISON YARD - CONTINOUS Abruzzi asks Michael where to find Fibonacci, but when Michael doesn't give him the information, his men beat Michael up. Michael tells Abruzzi if they come after him, he will come after Abruzzi. Abruzzi doubts it. INT. WARDEN POPE'S OFFICE - DAY Pope decides to put Michael in the SHU for 90 days for his action. Michael notices the date is April 11 on the calendar and offers to work on Taj Mahal to avoid the SHU. INT. BISHOP MCMORROW'S BEDROOM - NIGHT Someone shoots Bishop McMorrow. INT. VERONICA'S OFFICE - DAY Veronica's assistant tells her Bishop McMorrow was killed last night. Veronica realizes Michael was right and goes over Lincoln's case. INT. VISITATION AREA - DAY Lisa brings LJ over to get advice from his father, Lincoln. When it doesn't work, Lincoln tells LJ about being executed in a month. LJ doesn't care. He's already dead to him. INT. BEDROOM - DAY Sucre's girldfriend visits him to tell Sucre that she agrees to marry him. Sucre is so excited that he wants to have sex. Sucre's girlfriend tells Sucre her parents want them to wait until they get married in a Catholic church. It doesn't stop him and his girlfriend doesn't refuse either. INT. INFIRMARY - DAY Sara asks Michael a few questions after she discovered his body is reacting like he's not diabetic. Michael tells Sara he has Type I Diabetes ever since he was a kid. But when Sara goes to answer the phone, Michael's hand tingles (a sign of one of the questions Sara asked him) while checking out the wires running from the infirmary to the fence outside. Sara tells Michael she wants to run some tests next time he comes in to avoid administering insulin to a man who doesn't need it. INT. BEDROOM - DAY Sucre is worried that Hector is up to something when he discovered that Hector offered to give his girlfriend a ride to see him, believing that men and women can't be friends. EXT. PRISON YARD - DAY Michael offers an inmate cash to get him PUGNAc (insulin blocker). INT. CELL - DAY A guard gives Michael a PI card Abruzzi wanted him to have. INT. HALLWAY - DAY Michael is finally together with his brother, painting the wall. Abruzzi tells Michael he got bones. INT. LOCKERS - DAY Lincoln regrets pushing women he loved away (Veronica and Lisa). Michael tells him he pushes everyone away. Lincoln believes he's an anchor and will drag them down. Abruzzi's man asks why he hired Michael. Abruzzi quotes "keep your friends close and your enemies closer." INT. LOCKERS - CONTINOUS Lincoln asks Michael to fill him in on his plan to break him out and if he has blueprints of the prison Turns out Michael had blueprints tattooed on his body. 2. From that, make a list of the 5 Star Points for that show. Big Picture Hooks: Ask this: What is the big hook of this show? A structural engineer installed himself in the prison to break out his wrongly accused brother. Title: Prison Break Amazing and Intriguing Character: Ask this: What makes these main characters intriguing and interesting? Michael tattooed prison blueprints on his body and installed himself in a maximum security prison to break out his brother. He makes connection with the people that are part of his plan without any of them noticing. Veronica tries to help Michael despite Michael always rejecting her help. Lincoln remains calm even when he knows he's wrongly accused and will die in a month's time. Empathy / Distress: Ask this: What situation causes us to feel both empathy and distress for this character? Michael wants to break his brother, Lincoln, out of prison, but his brother only has a month before he's executed. Veronica wants to help Michael, but Michael won't accept her help. Lincoln tries to advise his son, LJ, but LJ won't listen. Layers / Open Loops: Ask this: What questions are created by this first episode that can only be answered by watching the entire season? Will Michael break his brother, Lincoln, out of prison? Will Michael get caught? Will Sara find out Michael is not diabetic? Will Veronica and Sebastian get married? Will Lincoln and his son, LJ, reconcile? Will Lincoln get executed? Inviting Obsession: Ask this: How does this pilot create the need to see every single episode? How is Michael going to break his brother, Lincoln, out of prison? Who set up Lincoln and why? Who killed Bishop McMorrow?
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It seems we are all having trouble posting our assignments. They must have forgotten to create the forum for posting assignments. We must be the first to use this new website. There was no trouble with the old one.
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I, Ben Ather, agree to the terms of this release form.
GROUP RELEASE FORM
As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.
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Hi all,
Name is Ben Ather. I have written eight scripts, four TVs. I want to use this course to finish my TV script (first draft done) and get it produced.
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Make changes in your BW framework and TV Pitch Bible. Every time you discover something new make changes in those two. Don’t worry about the rest.
Well, we don’t have TV Pitch Bible (I mean with everything put together like BW framework) so make changes in your assignments. That’s what I do.