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Five Guests: one livesThe killer is the Housekeeper who in reality is a horrid monster from another planet that can take on any shape it wants and speak any language. Her real name is unprounceable in English, but she adapted Velma for this role. Pretty with just a trace of an Easter European accent.
The leader of the group is Simpson Ragnaut. He is the most agitated of the five about the housekeeper. It was supposed to be discreet with the group dealing with any malfunctions.
The first to go is Croydon Monahan, who wanted out when the storm built up. who is killed checking the statis of the road away from the house. He sees the killer, but as Velma. He is shocked when he is drowned in the washed out road.
Character Death Croydon Monahan
Why Because the killer want to test out whether she can and Croy’s insistence on checking if the road was out gave her an excuse. She didn’t want a real reportHow: She drowns him but he sees who the killer is but not as the monster.
NEXT TO GO
Jenna Wolf she wonders where Croydon is, but the others stop her from going to check it out. Velma goes. Jenna calls her husband while she prepares a salad in the kitchen.
Jenna stabbed with a kitchen knife, she also sees the attacker. Her body dragged away before anyone is discoveredCharacter Death Jenna Wolf
Why She wonders where Croydon is wants to search for him, but others stop him. Calls husband from kitchen phone complains, rather leave than stay. Velma doesn’t like her attitude.How Stabbed with kitchen knife. She sees attacker. Body dragged away,
Lars Principato is at the computer when he discovers strange signals in the atmosphere inconsistent. Velma questions his findings as they snack. She turns into her monster self and attacks through neck with its claws.
Character Death Lars Principato, computer guru
Why He was picking up signals about Velma and needs to be stopped
How Velma turns into a monster behind Lars. He looks at the mirror as she is going to strike and chows down.
Charcater DEATH Christina DrumontWhy Christine witnessed the killing and sees the monster.
How With the secret out, Velma needs to act quickly. Christina Drumont witnessed the prior murder when she comes in and runs away. The monster chased her, they run past a startled Simpson, who is astounded into no action. She tears Christina apart. Simpson tries too late to stop it. He is cut by the thing.
Simpson escapes killer for now. Finds a phone in house, calls 911.
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ASSIGNMENT 2
Take these steps to create your Monster Reveal Track.
1. Create each part of this model:
A. Who is your monster and what is their terror? The monster is a horrid Alien-like creature from an unknown planet. Her mission is to find a planet they can inhabit.
• Powers? The monster can inhabit or replicate any creature on any planet, including speech. It’s a way to not be discovered. Oh yeah, when it inhabits its own body, it’s a gruesome killing machine, but one who could talk and think.
• Limitations? It doesn’t really have one, Subject to fatl injuries.
• Weaknesses? Another sore spot. This thing has no weak spot but needs a rare Kryptonite like substance to surive. How do they find out.
• Plan/Purpose/Appetite? The creature crash landed in an Alabama swamp. Her co-pilot broke his neck, he may come back to life, but doubt it. Requires this rare chemical. She will rustShe discovered she was on earth, and this seems like a good time to analyze it for whatever benefit. But it may entail killing the five before she takes off.
B. Sequence the reveals. Five astrophyscists met at a weekend retreat in the woods. When they arrived, they found Velma, a caretaker they didn’t expect and for some reason were not told about her. She said she is working on a degree from UAB. Velma is the creature in sheep’s clothing.
C. Create Demand for each clue/reveal.
2. Lay that over your current outline and fill in each clue/reveal using the tag “Monster Reveal:.”
Initial killing did not reveal the monster, thought he drowned. But the scientist show up at the door, brutally disfigured.
Second killing snares a woman who went looking for her friend, friend saw monster evolve from Velma. She is killed.
When group realizes two dead, appeal to Velma. No luck. Decided to leave together hold tight. A third scientist trips and falls and is dreagged. They get glimpse of monster they think it’s from the swamp. A creature. Three left, go hunting for the monster, Velma found outside says she wants to 4help.
A fourth is killed, but not until warns Velma is monster. Remaining two do not believe it. Get through to police, who said they will try and arrive b boat. Two left, break into a she steel tools for weapons. None has a gun, but knoves. One has to poop.Gets attacked then. Last survivor cries out to Velma to stop. She understands even in this position. Last survivor share information, We mean no harm.
Velma circles the scientist. He tries his best and thinks he vanquishes the monster. Till he takes off from the swamp, with precious fuel found in swamp.3. Answer the question “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” and put it at the top of your work. Develop a plan to gradually introduce the monster.
4. Post your assignment in the forums at https://www.screenwritingclasses.com/forums/
Subject line: (Billy’s) Monster Reveal Track (place in first line)
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Lesson 6
Five Guests: one lives
The killer is the Housekeeper who in reality is a horrid monster from another planet that can take on any shape it wants and speak any language. Her real name is unproduceable in English, but she adapted Velma for this role. Pretty with just a trace of an Easter European accent.
The leader of the group is Simpson Ragnaut. He is the most agitated of the five about the housekeeper. It was supposed to be discreet with the group dealing with any malfunctions.
The first to go is Croydon Monahan, who wanted out when the storm built up. who is killed checking the statis of the road away from the house. He sees the killer, but as Velma. He is shocked when he is drowned in the washed out road.
Character Death Croydon Monahan
Why Because the killer want to test out whether she can and Croy’s insistence on checking if the road was out gave her an excuse. She didn’t want a real reportHow: She drowns him but he sees who the killer is but not as the monster.
NEXT TO GO
Jenna Wolf she wonders where Croydon is, but the others stop her from going to check it out. Velma goes. Jenna calls her husband while she prepares a salad in the kitchen.
Jenna stabbed with a kitchen knife, she also sees the attacker. Her body dragged away before anyone is discoveredCharacter Death Jenna Wolf
Why She wonders where Croydon is wants to search for him, but others stop him. Calls husband from kitchen phone complains, rather leave than stay. Velma doesn’t like her attitude.How Stabbed with kitchen knife. She sees attacker. Body dragged away,
Lars Principato is at the computer when he discovers strange signals in the atmosphere inconsistent. Velma questions his findings as they snack. She turns into her monster self and attacks through neck with its claws.
Character Death Lars Principato, computer guru
Why He was picking up signals about Velma and needs to be stopped
How Velma turns into a monster behind Lars. He looks at the mirror as she is going to strike and chows down.
Charcater DEATH Christina DrumontWhy Christine witnessed the killing and sees the monster.
How With the secret out, Velma needs to act quickly/ Christina takes off past a startled Simpson who urges him to leave. Then he sees Velma as the monster. They both run ijnto the woods. Simpson hides and can hear the monster rip Christina apart. Guilty, Simpson runs back to save his colleague bu to no avail and he flees. The monster follows.
Christina Drumont witnessed the murder when she comes in and runs away. The monster chased her, they run past Simpson, who is astounded into no action. She tears Christina apart. Simpson tries too late to stop it. He IS CUT BY THE THING
Simpson escapes killer for now. Finds a phone in house, calls 911.
Says where he is. Monster. Thay don’t believe him, -
ASSIGNMENT LESSON 4/5
Create your plot.
1. Knowing your concept, fill in one or two sentences for each of the plot points.
ACT 1 — SET UP FOR HORROR
• Atmosphere of Evil established
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Ship crash lands. Co-pilot near death, pleads with other pilot. Other pilot changes shape to horrid dinosaur-like creature and tears co-pilot apart. No evidence. Reports whereabouts to superiors in native tongue and Englash.Horror Situation: Co-pilot mortally injured in crash. Other pilot decides its best to put him out of his misery. She turns evil
Reaction – Escape: Monster attacks devours pilot.
Horror Situation: Surviving pilot reverts to American self, breaks into house using key. She hows like a coyote.
• Connect with the characters
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Five members arroive at the house one by one. They joke, comment on the retreat in the backwoods. Checked phone it works. They meet housekeeper who they did not know about. Taken back by it.• The characters are warned not to do it.
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Some get pissed off this interloper is here. She takes pains to assure them. One person leaves others stay. Person who leaves ends up dead.Denial of Horror Stay until morning and get in touch. Must have a working connection.
Nothing happened to be nervous about. Caretaker eavesdrops.• Safety taken away. Member who left rings bell. When go to door, he is dying and destroyed.
Horror Situation Man who tried to escape is mutilated and screaming
Reaction” We have to get out of here.
Horror Situation Can’t get out, storm washed road away.
• Monster: The nature of the beast. No clue who did this. Attempt to call cops fails. They insist caretaker find help. She says you were told isolated,
Horror Situation: road out, no phone and caretaker refuses to help
Reaction Not my problem, she says.
ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN
• Isolated / Trapped / Abducted A storm has come in. Fear that road will wash out. Who the hell booked this location. WE WANTED NO INTERRUPTIONS. What do you call the body out there.
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One of us killed. One of five wants to go out and check the road see if we can make it out.Horror Situation: But one of them is gone. They can’t find her anywhere.IS SHE DEAD OR HE
Reaction: They spread out, within sight of each other, and look for her. TWO AGREE TO LOOK OUT FOR HER OR HIM
Horror Situation: They hear her screaming inside the shack!. THEY HEAR SCREAMS IN THE DISTANT, GETTING CLOSER THAN FARTHER AWAY
Reaction: Two guys try to break into the door, but it is impenetrable.THE TWO HEAR A ROAR. COMES FROM BENEATH THE GROUND. They follow sounds to a DOOR. tONE WISHES TO RETURN TO SAFETY THEY OPEN DOOR, MONSTER REACHES OUT WHILE EATING MISSING PERSON. THEY SLAM IT SHUT. ON THEIR SCREAMING FRIEND.
Horror Situation: The door seems to open up and swallow one of the guys. ONE WANTS TO GO BACK. THE OTHER PERSUADES HIM NOT TO
Character Death: The door has closed on half of his body. He dies an agonizing death.
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MIDPOINT: The monster is worse than we thought!
• Full pursuit by the killer. Second death We get a glimpse of the monster killer, not fully though
• Terrorized. Remainder freak out. They insist caretaker do something. She must have a phone with better capabilities. What does she know about what is in the swamps. Nothing, she says. One of group steps partway outside picks up a static call service. Can’t remember name or street, part of space center. Crack of thunder, service cuts out. Caller gets inside just in time, but they don’t see the monster.
ACT 3 — FULL OUT HORROR
• Fight to the death. Maybe after finally putting together who the killer is
• Hysteria. The survivors either have a head on their shoulder trying to stop a creature they don’t know. Other are freaking out
• The thrilling escape from death. In the effort to stay alive, the survivors plot ways to avoid the creature. They got a glimpse of the full monster, a couple escapes only to be snared later,
• Death returns to take one or more. They finally discover the caretaker is the monster, they don’t know how. They corner her, she changes to the monster, yelling curses in her native language. She writes notes on a virtual board, confusing the
• Resolution. Either the leader or a woman survive, and kill the beast. But when they drag it to the outside of the house, turn their back, it’s gone. They search, see a small craft ascend from the swamp.
2. Answer the question “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” and put it at the top of your work. I learned how a monster will spoil their party
3. Post your assignment in the forums at https://www.screenwritingclasses.com/forums/
Subject line: (Your Name’s) Horror Plot (place in first line)
Deadline: 48 hours
. I learned how a monster will spoil their party
Lesson 5
Isolated Situations WHAT DO I DO WITH THESE
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• Trapped
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• Forces of nature
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• Attacked or chased
• Impending doom
• Monster approaching
• Monster trying to get to you
• See another killed
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• Dilemma: Who to save: Them or me? Or Person A versus Person B?
• Friends in danger
• A character becomes a liability (physically)
• Internal conflict in the group
• Menacing Stranger
• A character refuses to take action
• Fall through the floor
• Threatened
• Face to face with the monster
• Walking into a trap
• Lured into the horror
• Helping a good person and being attacked -
Lesson 5 Bill’s horror plot
What I learned is how they deal with first exposure to monster.
ACT 1 — SET UP FOR HORROR
• Atmosphere of Evil established
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Ship crash lands. Co-pilot near death, pleads with other pilot. Other pilot changes shape to horrid dinosaur-like creature and tears co-pilot apart. No evidence. Reports whereabouts to superiors in native tongue and Englash.Horror Situation: Co-pilot mortally injured in crash. Other pilot decides its best to put him out of his misery. She turns evil
Reaction – Escape: Monster attacks devours pilot.
Horror Situation: Surviving pilot reverts to American self, breaks into house using key. She hows like a coyote.
• Connect with the characters
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Five members arroive at the house one by one. They joke, comment on the retreat in the backwoods. Checked phone it works. They meet housekeeper who they did not know about. Taken back by it.• The characters are warned not to do it.
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Some get pissed off this interloper is here. She takes pains to assure them. One person leaves others stay. Person who leaves ends up dead.Denial of Horror Stay until morning and get in touch. Must have a working connection.
Nothing happened to be nervous about. Caretaker eavesdrops.• Safety taken away. Member who left rings bell. When go to door, he is dying and destroyed.
Horror Situation Man who tried to escape is mutilated and screaming
Reaction” We have to get out of here.
Horror Situation Can’t get out, storm washed road away.
• Monster: The nature of the beast. No clue who did this. Attempt to call cops fails. They insist caretaker find help. She says you were told isolated,
Horror Situation: road out, no phone and caretaker refuses to help
Reaction Not my problem, she says.
ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN
• Isolated / Trapped / Abducted A storm has come in. Fear that road will wash out. Who the hell booked this location. WE WANTED NO INTERRUPTIONS. What do you call the body out there.
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One of us killed. One of five wants to go out and check the road see if we can make it out.Horror Situation: But one of them is gone. They can’t find her anywhere.IS SHE DEAD OR HE
Reaction: They spread out, within sight of each other, and look for her. TWO AGREE TO LOOK OUT FOR HER OR HIM
Horror Situation: They hear her screaming inside the shack!. THEY HEAR SCREAMS IN THE DISTANT, GETTING CLOSER THAN FARTHER AWAY
Reaction: Two guys try to break into the door, but it is impenetrable.THE TWO HEAR A ROAR. COMES FROM BENEATH THE GROUND. They follow sounds to a DOOR. tONE WISHES TO RETURN TO SAFETY THEY OPEN DOOR, MONSTER REACHES OUT WHILE EATING MISSING PERSON. THEY SLAM IT SHUT. ON THEIR SCREAMING FRIEND.
Horror Situation: The door seems to open up and swallow one of the guys. ONE WANTS TO GO BACK. THE OTHER PERSUADES HIM NOT TO
Character Death: The door has closed on half of his body. He dies an agonizing death.
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Bill’s Horror Plot
. I learned how a monster will spoil their party
ASSIGNMENT LESSON 4/5
Create your plot.
1. Knowing your concept, fill in one or two sentences for each of the plot points.
ACT 1 — SET UP FOR HORROR
• Atmosphere of Evil established
Ship crash lands. Co-pilot near death, pleads with other pilot. Other pilot changes shape to horrid dinosaur-like creature and tears co-pilot apart. No evidence. Reports whereabouts to superiors in native tongue and Englash.• Connect with the characters
Five members arroive at the house one by one. They joke, comment on the retreat in the backwoods. Checked phone it works. They meet housekeeper who they did not know about. Taken back by it.
• The characters are warned not to do it.
Some get pissed off this interloper is here. She takes pains to assure them. One person leaves others stay. Person who leaves ends up dead.
Denial of Horror Stay until morning and get in touch. Must have a working connection.
Nothing happened to be nervous about. Caretaker eavesdrops.
• Safety taken away. Member who left rings bell. When go to door, he is dying and destroyed.• Monster: The nature of the beast. No clue who did this. Attempt to call cops fails. They insist caretaker find help. She says you were told isolated,
ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN
• Isolated / Trapped / Abducted A storm has come in. Fear that road will wash out. Who the hell booked this location. WE WANTED NO INTERRUPTIONS. What do you call the body out there.
• One of us killed. One of five wants to go out and check the road see if we can make it out.
MIDPOINT: The monster is worse than we thought!
• Full pursuit by the killer. Second death We get a glimpse of the monster killer, not fully though
• Terrorized. Remainder freak out. They insist caretaker do something. She must have a phone with better capabilities. What does she know about what is in the swamps. Nothing, she says. One of group steps partway outside picks up a static call service. Can’t remember name or street, part of space center. Crack of thunder, service cuts out. Caller gets inside just in time, but they don’t see the monster.
ACT 3 — FULL OUT HORROR
• Fight to the death. Maybe after finally putting together who the killer is
• Hysteria. The survivors either have a head on their shoulder trying to stop a creature they don’t know. Other are freaking out
• The thrilling escape from death. In the effort to stay alive, the survivors plot ways to avoid the creature. They got a glimpse of the full monster, a couple escapes only to be snared later,
• Death returns to take one or more. They finally discover the caretaker is the monster, they don’t know how. They corner her, she changes to the monster, yelling curses in her native language. She writes notes on a virtual board, confusing the
• Resolution. Either the leader or a woman survive, and kill the beast. But when they drag it to the outside of the house, turn their back, it’s gone. They search, see a small craft ascend from the swamp.
2. Answer the question “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” and put it at the top of your work. I learned how a monster will spoil their party
3. Post your assignment in the forums at https://www.screenwritingclasses.com/forums/
Subject line: (Your Name’s) Horror Plot (place in first line)
Deadline: 48 hours
. I learned how a monster will spoil their party
Lesson 5
Isolated Situations WHAT DO I DO WITH THESE
• Lost
• Trapped
• Shackled
• Kidnapped
• Being lured into danger
• Forces of nature
• The only one who sees the monster
B. Pursued Situations
• Attacked or chased
• Forced into a dangerous environment
• Impending doom
• No escape or their escape route has been cut off
• Monster approaching
• Monster trying to get to you
• Out of the frying pan and into the fire
C. Torture Situations
• Injured, wounded, or debilitated
• See another killed
• Something inside our body
• Transformed into something else (zombie, possessed, touched rotting monster)
• Physically tortured
• Mentally tortured
D. Tormented Situations
• Possessed
• Tricked
• Dilemma: Who to save: Them or me? Or Person A versus Person B?
• Friends in danger
• Another character loses it (hysterical)
• A character becomes a liability (physically)
E. Paranoia Situations
• The group has been infiltrated
• Suspecting someone else is possessed
• Not knowing who is possessed
• Unknown motive
• Internal conflict in the group
• Menacing Stranger
• A character refuses to take action
F. Spooky Situations
• Slimed
• Doing something forbidden
• Fall through the floor
• Threatened
• Face to face with the monster
• Can not see (fog, being underwater), speak or yell, hear (too loud or too quiet)
• Environment changing around you
G. Deceptive Situations
• Walking into a trap
• Lured into the horror
• Helping a good person and being attacked
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SUBJECT: The alien girl takes the name Brenda, says she is the housekeeper, hired to see that the new gadgets run correctly. She is tech versed, with a degree in Astrophysics from UGA. Leader wondering why he was not notified if your presence.
1. Tell us your Concept and the Group you have chosen. Alien crash lands on Earth one co-pilot dead. The other uses powers to become convincing woman who speaks language and breaks into a well-appointed home in the Alabama woods just off the Aerospace campus. A group of five scientists plan to spend a weekend at the house unaware of the unexpected visitor.
2. Tell us the Dying Pattern of this movie. Kill characters one by one, without revealing the killer, but two survive.
3. Give us an Identity and a sentence for each character that makes up your group. VP of Mars Human Probe, Chris. She’s the leader of the group. Second in command and her love interest is Sheila. All six are brilliant minds. Terence is the doubting Thomas convinced Mars mission is a pipe dream, but his math comprehension skills are invaluable. Braden volunteered to be among initial set of astronauts; he’s gung-ho. Hendy, the lone black guy has mixed feelings about the mission. It’s a cost factor not a skill factor. He wants to prove he belongs. Frederick or Freddy, known as the collector. His job is to map landing and travel stations for more relevant locations.
Example: Leader: Without much consideration, Mike sets a direction, then inspires or pushes the group to go there. Hopefully, he guesses the right direction.
4. Answer the question “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” and put it at the top of your work. How the group will not only act as a match for the alien skill set but learn more than any computer printout. Of course, if the alien is a blood-thirsty monster such learning is out the window.Comparisons: Alien with a monster with an advanced brain and a degree,
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• Title / Concept: The Rental Two couples book a getaway at a beautiful house overlooking the ocean with no neighbors around.
• Terrorize The Characters: There is a suspicion on the part of one couple that something isn’t right. The girl and the guy of the other couple discover hidden cameras in the shower, which begins the downward spiral.
• Isolation: No neighbors and a dark road and a steep drop to the ocean
• Death: Caretaker and all four stars perish.
• Monster/Villain: There seems to be two villains but we never see who they are or ID them.
• High Tension: The killing of the four stars happens somewhat quickly and at the end.
• Departure from Reality: The location, the four unexplained murders
• Moral Statement: A girl from one couple cheated on her husband with the guy from the other couple. They also disposed of the caretaker body thinking they killed him when they did not. Tey should have called police.The dog was the first missing creature. The ad clearly said no pets but the couple didn’t care. The dog turns up at the end.
The villain puts new cameras in the shower and elsewhere and new tenants arrive for his jollies. One woman puts a mask on her honey.
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I agree.
Bill Sokolic
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Name: Bill Sokolic
2. How many scripts you’ve written? 8-9, not all of them ready for human contact. Only one is horror.
3. What you hope to get out of the class? A polished horror script
4. Something unique, special, strange or unusual about you? Where to begin. I also wrote three novels without a home. And I am a reporter. And I myself am strange and unusual, with too many instances to list here. I’ll leave you with one word: lipsnot.