[David Becker]

Title: The Road to Painted Hills

Genre: Drama

Synopsis:

When a suicidal ex-con receives news of his cancer, he resolves to finally confront his painful past.

He journeys to rural Oregon to visit the mother of the twin girls he killed one night 22 years before in a drink-driving accident, seeking forgiveness and redemption.

But before he can reveal his true identity, he unexpectedly finds himself falling in love with her.

Coming to her aid after a devastating fire, he pledges to support her and her estranged son. But he faces a tortuous dilemma: does he continue to live a wonderful lie, or does he tell the truth, up-end their lives and destroy the only love he has ever known?

Will the dogged police chief, increasingly suspicious of the new stranger in town, unearth his true identity, crimes and misdemeanours?

And will their love withstand the truth of what really happened that night?

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

With appreciation,

R. David Becker

Bio: R. David Becker is an optioned screenwriter who has won awards with Page and the Screenplay Festival.

Contact info:
Phone: + 44 7799664256
Email: david@beckerkemp.com
https://www.linkedin.com/in/david-becker-71a0381b7/

• This reply was modified 1 year, 2 months ago by  David Becker.

[David Becker]

My name is David Becker and I live in the Hertfordshire Hills outside London.

I’ve written four feature scripts. The one I did for MSC15 has been optioned and should start shooting this summer.

I struggle with marketing and need to improve my skills in this area. But I know it works! My MSC15 script got picked up through cold-calling a producer on LinkedIn.

I once competed in the World Memory Championships. Odd, I know.

[David Becker]

I agree to the terms of the release

[David Becker]

Hi Joan

Thanks so much for your reply. Good luck with the project, which sounds fascinating! You clearly have a passion for this genre… My script is done and, apart from perhaps one more round of editing, will be ready to go to market in the next few weeks, hence the need to polish up on my marketing!

All the best!

Richard David Becker

• This reply was modified 1 year, 2 months ago by  David Becker.

[David Becker]

Hi Joan

I like your title and the structure of the Query Letter is great. You set it up nicely and love the posed question at the end to hook the reader. Well done, you nailed it! My only additional points, in terms of content, are the following:

1. I had to look up the reference to Tammany Hall and the Triangle Shirtwaist Fire. Granted, I am not from NY (or Irish) but I am fairly well-read. Are you confident that any producer reading this will know what you are talking about here? If not, you run the risk of a producer being slightly confused by these references.

2. With regards to the words ‘he grows up to become a scrap metal czar’, are you referring to Charles Flynn or 3 year old Michael? It is not entirely clear with reference to the preceding paragraphs. And if Michael was left on the dock (presumably in the UK) how did he then get to the US? That part is a bit confusing for me.

Otherwise, great job

[David Becker]

Hi Joan

Thanks so much for the feedback. Much appreciated. I’ll review yours shortly!

Hugs,

Richard David Becker