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Lesson 11 Query: 2nd draft

Eden De Ruse-Moore Query Letter
Yankee Doodle Daddy
Genre: Dramedy

Dear (Producer’s Name):

Inauguration Day: Your wife is the President-Elect. Even bigger news—she’s pregnant!

Joe Harley, the highest-paid ballplayer in Yankee history, is determined to be an All-Star, stay-at-home Dad in the White House.

But when Baby Ruth is born, Joe struggles with fatherhood and his identity.

As the President deals with a Senate investigation dubbed “Babygate” and a Russian land grab heats up, Joe feels lost and undervalued. His fumbling through fatherhood escalates and then a sex scandal breaks with Joe at the center.

This legendary Yankee must bring his ‘A-game to his Babygate testimony, or…

He could lose what matters most—his family. With the world watching, Joe knows he can’t afford to strike out.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

BIO: Eden, is an optioned screenwriter. She has been a finalist in multiple screenwriting contests.

Best,

Eden De Ruse-Moore
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Hello Rebecca,
I second Michael’s comments. You are a talented writer and after reading your V3 Query. I was wondering if you have the actual "life rights" to the story of this family. If you do, this is a BIG buzz word that producers like — therefore, I would recommend putting it inside your query. If you do not you mentioned that you are connected to Eleanor, perhaps you can ask about getting this in writing. I can see this as a limited series with lots of conflict and drama.
Best of luck,
Eden
p.s. apoloiges for keyboard malfunctions.

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Hi Rebecca,
Your suggestions are amazing I was thinking about cutting my qurey in half word wise and you have got me moving in the right direction. Much appreciated.
Eden

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Lesson 11 Query: 1st draft
Eden De Ruse-Moore Query Letter
Yankee Doodle Daddy
Genre: Dramedy

It’s Inauguration Day. Your wife is the President Elect. That’s big news! Even bigger news is—you just found out she’s pregnant!

Joe Harley, the highest paid Yankee in baseball history steps up to the plate to handle all things baby in the White House. And he is determined to be an All-Star, stay-at-home Dad. But, when Baby Ruth is born…

Will Joe’s new role as the First Daddy be his undoing or his redemption?

POTUS, works 24/7 dealing with a Senate investigation coined “Babygate” as a Russian land grab heats up. Joe now feels lost and undervalued after insisting on becoming a stay-at-home Dad, he fumbles through fatherhood and grapples with his own identity. Then, a sex scandal breaks with the First Daddy at its center.

Joe needs to turn things around and bring his ‘A-game to his Babygate testimony or else… this ex-Yankee could lose what matters most to him, his family.

With an entire world watching, Joe knows he can’t afford to strike out.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

Eden De Ruse-Moore
BIO: Eden, a former journalist on Capitol Hill, is an optioned screenwriter. She has been a finalist in multiple screenwriting contests.

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Eden De Ruse-Moore Query Letter
Yankee Doodle Daddy
Genre: Dramedy

It’s Inauguration Day, and your wife is the President Elect. That’s big news! Even bigger news is—you just found out she’s pregnant!

Joe Harley a baseball legend steps up to the plate to handle all things baby in the White House. Despite being clueless and lacking the skills needed to care for a baby, Joe is determined to be an All-Star, stay-at-home Dad. Thus, when Baby Ruth is born…

Joe fumbles through fatherhood while political rivals threaten his wife’s administration.

POTUS deals with a Senate investigation coined Babygate as intense international relations heat up involving Russia. Joe feels undervalued at home. Adding to his confusion he’s mocked by the media for not embracing his feminine side. And then… a sex scandal breaks with Joe at the center.

Joe must resolve his identity crisis and fire up his ‘A-game during his Babygate testimony or else… he could lose what matters most to him, his family.

With an entire world watching, Joe knows he can’t afford to strike out.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

Sincerely,

Eden De Ruse-Moore

BIO: Eden, a former journalist on Capitol Hill, is an optioned screenwriter. She has been a finalist in multiple screenwriting contests.

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Eden De Ruse-Moore – Pitch Fest Pitch

What I learned in this lesson is to keep your pitch short and clear. Be prepared to answer questions regarding budget, actors and story acts using one sentence if possible. edited draft after attending week 3 class.

Hi, I’m Eden De Ruse-Moore and I’m an optioned screenwriter. Today, I’m going to pitch my dramedy. The title of my screenplay is: Yankee Doodle Daddy.

Can a former pro-ballplayer succeed in the White House as the First Daddy—when POTUS, his wife informs him that she’s pregnant?

Q&A
Budget Range – Mid range 15-30 million
Actors do you like for the lead roles?
Joe Harley – Former Yankee ballplayer; Theo James; Adam Demos & POTUS Adria Arjona; Eliza Gonzalez;
Benji – Former Yankee Coach: Paul Giamatti; Matt Damon; Rob Reiner.

ACT ONE
POTUS tells Joe she’s pregnant and Joe insists on taking care of all things Baby therefore he can get out of his annoying FGOTUS obligations.

ACT TWO
Arrival of Baby Ruth – Joe in his new role as The First Daddy fumbles while POTUS deals with cut-throat politics and intense international relations.

ACT THREE
Joe’s identity crisis becomes full blown, jeopardizing his marriage and Babygate intensifies as Russia is poised to invade the Minsk. Joe is subpoenaed.

How does it end?

Joe shares his fears of a second child with Zena, he lays everything on the table, they make up and agree to eventually give Ruth a sibling. Russia aborts and thanks to Joe’s heroic testimony Babygate is squashed.
Baby Ruth’s Birthday party: Team Nanny & White House Staff on a Super Yacht.

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Eden De Ruse-Moore Query Letter
What I learned in this assignment be sure to have hooks to keep them reading.

Yankee Doodle Daddy
Genre: Dramedy

Can a former pro-ballplayer succeed in the White House as the First Daddy when his wife, our Commander in Chief, informs him that she’s pregnant?

Overjoyed, Joe Harley, an American League MVP, steps up to the plate when he hears a baby is on its way. But when his daughter is born, Joe lacks the required skills necessary to be an All-Star, stay-at-home Dad. Still, he’s no quitter and he’s determined to prove his skeptics wrong.

While Joe fumbles through fatherhood, political rivals threaten his wife’s administration.

As POTUS deals with a Senate investigation coined Babygate, intense international relations surface involving Russia. Joe feels undervalued at home. Adding to his confusion he’s mocked by the media for not embracing his feminine side. And then… a sex scandal breaks with Joe at the center.

Joe must resolve his identity crisis and fire up his ‘A-game during his Babygate testimony or else… he could lose what matters most to him, his family.

With an entire world watching, Joe can’t afford to strike out.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

Sincerely,

Eden De Ruse-Moore

BIO: Eden, a former journalist on Capitol Hill, is an optioned screenwriter. She has been a finalist in multiple screenwriting contests.

Contact information (inserted here).

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Eden De Ruse-Moore High Concept/Elevator Pitch (rewrite)
What I learned doing this assignment: Your elevator pitch should be short and not filled with lots of descriptive words —
1. High Concept:
When POTUS reveals she’s pregnant her husband a former Yankee takes on the role of Mother Goose in the White House.
2. Most interesting way possible:
Dilemma – Married to POTUS has it’s perks but being known as the nation’s First Daddy is NOT one of them.
Main Conflict – A former Yankee ballplayer is determined to prove to a nation he can care for a baby and remain faithful to his wife.
What’s at stake? If this ballplayer cannot get a grip on his new identity, he may lose his family and jeopardize his wife’s administration.
Goal/Unique Opposition – How can this former Yankee keep his “man-card” when he’s constantly told to get in touch with your feminine side.
3. Elevator Pitch:
1. I’m finishing up a story about an Ex-Yankee who becomes the First Daddy, juggling diapers and diplomacy in the White House.”
It’s: The American President meets Three Men and A Baby

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Yankee Doodle Daddy – Eden De Ruse-Moore Phone Pitch
What I learned from this lesson is: You can give a pitch over the phone but it needs to be short and specific to the production company.
Write out your phone pitch along with answers to the questions:

1) I will lead with :
• High Concept: Hi, I’m Eden De Ruse-Moore, and I have a Pregnant POTUS script where the husband a former Yankee ballplayer must become Mother Goose.

2) Script for phone call pitches:

• Credibility: I’m an optioned screenwriter, my screenplay Yankee Doodle Daddy was a recent finalist in the New York Metropolitan Screenwriters and Film Awards.
• Great Title: Hi I’m Eden De Ruse-Moore and I have a feel-good, dramedy titled Yankee Doodle Daddy.
• Business Hook: Hi I’m Eden De Ruse-Moore and I have a screenplay similar to Barbie but with a unique focus.

3) Give us a one or two sentence answer to the questions a producer may ask:
• What’s the budget range? – Mid Budget $15 to 30 Million
• Who do you see in the main roles? – Joe Harley – Former Yankee ballplayer: Jake Gyllenhaal; Glen Powel; Theo James; Zena Harley – POTUS: Jennifer Lawrence; Anna Kendrick; Eliza Gonzalez Jefferson –Grandfather: Patrick Stewart; Liam Neeson/ Benji – Former Yankee Coach: James Gandolfini. Agent Carter – Secret Service: Daryl McCormack, Rege-Jean Page
• How many pages is the script? 120 pages
• Who else has seen this? ScreenCraft Fellowship Review Panel
• Why do you think this fits our company?
My story aligns with films that you have previously, produced. Yankee Doodle Daddy is a high concept script and by design it is similar to the box office hit film, Barbie. Which makes it enticing to investors. The film uses comedy to address serious issues of identity, parenthood and the pressures of public office, ensuring that there is small scale drama and macro-political scandals baked into the core concept.
• How does the movie end? POTUS thwarts a Russian invasion, Joe regains his identity and his true love and support for his wife deepens. He testifies before Babygate, his arguments save the day. He declares to the media, that as The First Daddy he will continue to raise his daughter to be just like her mommy, so she can grow up to be a strong leader.

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Eden De Ruse-Moore – Pitch Fest Pitch

What I learned in this lesson is to keep your pitch short and be prepared to answer questions regarding budget, actors and story acts include payoffs.

Hi, I’m Eden De Ruse-Moore and I’m an optioned screenwriter. Today, I’m going to pitch my dramedy. The title of my screenplay is: Yankee Doodle Daddy.

It’s Inauguration Day, and Joe Harley a former Yankee known for hitting fast balls is now the father of the First Fetus when his wife, the President Elect informs him that she’s pregnant.

Please give your one or two sentence answer to each of these questions:

Budget Range – Mid range 15-30 million

Actors do you like for the lead roles?

Joe Harley – Former Yankee ballplayer: Jake Gyllenhaal; Glen Powel; Theo James; Oscar Isaac.
Zena Harley – POTUS: Jennifer Lawrence; Anna Kendrick; Adria Arjona;
Grandfather: Patrick Stewart; Liam Neeson/ Benji – Yankee Coach: James Gandolfini.
Agent Carter – Secret Service: Daryl McCormack, Rege-Jean Page

ACT ONE
POTUS tells Joe she’s pregnant.
Crawford, Benji, White House players introductions
Motivated to get out of frivolous FGOTUS duties, Joe plans to be Mother Goose.

ACT TWO
Arrival of Baby Ruth – Joe in his new role as The First Daddy.
Cover: Babygate, Beltway Baby Czar, Marschinke Bill drama, Fun and Games; Russia; plus the question of Baby #2.

ACT THREE
It’s the final straw, Joe storms out of the Oval – is this the end of their marriage?
Sex Scandal hits internet – Both Benji and Joe are subpoenaed. Guilty?
Russian Invasion – Sergei has troops poised.
Babygate makes it appear that POTUS could be impeached.

How does it end?
Joe shares his fears of a second child with Zena, he lays everything on the table, they make up and agree to eventually give Ruth a sibling.
The sex scandal blows over after Benji testifies and Mindy recants her story.
Zena doesn’t back down and Sergei aborts his invasion
Joe asserts that Babygate is unconstitutional. His argument has merit and Babygate is dropped. Crawford resigns and the Marschinke Bill passes.

Credibility:
BIO: Eden has worked as a journalist on Capitol Hill. Yankee Doodle Daddy became a finalist in the New York Metropolitan Screenwriters and Film Awards, previously she has had two original screenplays optioned.

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Yes. I tried connecting with Zoom support to see if there was any word on a cancelation but it was a bott. So waiting for host means we are all connected. I hope Cheryl and Hal are okay. I’ll continue to stick around for any updates.

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Is this meeting going on tonight I did not se the recording once I logged in.

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Eden De Ruse-Moore Query Letter

What I learned doing this assignment is a Bio. can be 2 or 3 sentences.

Joe Harley a home run king, known for hitting fast balls is now the father of the First Fetus.

The President Elect, surprises her husband on Inauguration Day, whispering, “Joe, I think, I’m pregnant.” This former playboy/pro-ballplayer will soon trade his gym bag in for a Hello Kitty, diaper bag.

Joe intends to prove to a nation that he can be the perfect Mother Goose. However, cut-throat D.C. politics complicates everything. To make matters worse, he’s constantly being told to connect with his feminine side but to never “give up” his man-card.

Like the smash-hit film, Barbie. Think – Just Ken in the White House. Joe’s entire life, was baseball, but now he’s challenged with a crisis of identity. Joe knows he must “get a grip” and significantly turn things around or he will lose his wife and put her entire administration in jeopardy.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

Sincerely,
Eden De Ruse-Moore

BIO: Eden has worked as a journalist on Capitol Hill. Yankee Doodle Daddy became a finalist in the New York Metropolitan Screenwriters and Film Awards, previously she has had two original screenplays optioned.

CONTACT details

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Eden De Ruse-Moore Query Letter
What I learned doing this assignment AI is so cool and helpful.

Joe Harley a home run king, known for hitting fast balls is now the father of the First Fetus.

The President Elect, finds out on Inauguration Day that she’s pregnant and her former Yankee husband soon trades his gym bag in for a Hello Kitty, diaper bag.

Joe intends to prove to a nation that he can be the perfect Mother Goose. Unfortunately, it’s complicated – thanks to cut-throat politics. To make matters worse, Joe’s reminded to connect with his feminine side but to never “give up” his man-card.

Like the smash-hit film, Barbie, think – “Just Ken in the White House,” Joe’s entire life has been baseball. However, now this ballplayer grapples with his sense of self and purpose. Joe must “get a grip” and redefine his identity or he will lose what matters most, his family.

If you like the concept, I’d be happy to send you the script.

Sincerely,

Eden De Ruse-Moore

BIO: Eden has worked as a journalist on Capitol Hill. Yankee Doodle Daddy became a finalist in the New York Metropolitan Screenwriters and Film Awards, previously she has had two original screenplays optioned.

CONTACT details – listed.

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Eden De Ruse-Moore High Concept/Elevator Pitch

What I learned doing this assignment: To make your concept short and dynamic, is NOT an easy task but a must!

High Concept:
Beside America’s first female President is a homerun king with a diaper bag.

• Dilemma – Married to POTUS has it’s perks but being known as the nation’s First Daddy is NOT one of them.

• Main Conflict – A former Yankee ballplayer is determined to prove to a nation he can care for a baby and remain faithful to his wife.

• What’s at stake? If this ballplayer cannot turn Babygate around he may lose his family and it will cost his wife her job.

• Goal/Unique Opposition – How do you keep your “man-card” when you’re constantly told to get in touch with your feminine side.

Elevator Pitch:

I’m finishing up a story that answers the question if America ever had a pregnant President who would take care of her baby?

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Eden De Ruse-Moore Synopsis Hooks

What I learned doing this assignments is focus on just your hooks, that will make a great pitch.

MIT Hooks

• Zena (aka POTUS) goes into labor during the All Star game.

• Joe Harley as a Yankee hit fast balls for a living.

• Senator Crawford leads an investigation on the Capitol Hill coined Babygate.

• Joe is discredited on national TV by the Baby Czar for his lack of parenting skills.

• Joe needing baby care back-up, enlists the aid of his former Yankee coach, a Secret Service Agent, and Ruth’s grandfather a decorated Vietnam vet — this fierce foursome make up Team Nanny.

• Joe has a heated argument in Tokyo with Zena because he feels neglected.

• Zena is ready for a second child but Joe is not.

COM Hooks

• The President finds out she’s pregnant on Inauguration Day, and tells her spouse the news as she’s about to be sworn in.

• Given the situation, Operation First Fetus is to remain confidential until the State of the Union

• Similar to Barbie, (box office success). Joe’s entire adult life has been based on one thing: being a Yankee. But in his role as the First Daddy he experiences a crisis of identity, and later a reckoning of his own masculinity and personal flaws.

Title: YANKEE DOODLE DADDY

Genre: Dramedy/Romance

It’s a BIG day! Your wife the President Elect is about to be sworn into office and there’s even bigger news — she thinks she’s pregnant.

Joe Harley a former Yankee, a man who hit fast balls for a living is the father of the First Fetus.

Joe is asked to return to Yankee stadium to throw out the first pitch at the All Star game this brings back a flood of emotions but there’s no time for that because POTUS has gone into labor.

When the adorable Baby Ruth is born, Zena’s biggest political rival, Senator Crawford leads a Special Investigation on Capitol Hill coined, Babygate.

Joe trained for fatherhood by reading all Doctor Wagamoe’s books. But the self-proclaimed Baby Czar discredits Joe for his baby blunders on national TV.

Joe needing baby care back-up, enlists the aid of his former Yankee coach, a Secret Service Agent, and Ruth’s grandfather, a decorated Vietnam vet — this fierce foursome make up Team Nanny.

Yankee Doodle Daddy is similar to the box office hit film, Barbie. Think – Just Ken in the White House –

Joe’s entire life has been defined by baseball which gives him anxiety causing an identity crisis to brew. Joe is often criticized for “not being in touch with his feminine side.” Yet while POTUS runs the nation he’s devoted to his role as a stay-at-home Dad.

Joe shares his feelings of neglect and being undervalued with Zena which results in a heated argument.

To add further tension to their marriage Zena is ready for a second child but Joe is not.

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Eden De Ruse-Moore 10 Most Interesting Things
“What I learned doing this assignment is backstory is not necessary in a pitch.

1) Joe’s official title, FGOTUS, clashes with his home run king identity.

2) Zena (aka POTUS) goes into labor during the All Star game.

3) Senator Crawford leads an investigation on the Capitol Hill coined Babygate.

4) Zena and Joe play strip Monopoly on Air Force One.

5) Joe is shamed on national TV by the Baby Czar for having no parenting skills.

6) Joe needing baby care back-up, does not hire any professional nannies, instead he hires three dudes he knows he can depend on.

7) Joe has a heated argument in Tokyo with Zena because he feels neglected.

8) POTUS is told that Russia is poised to invade Minsk.

9) To the surprise of everyone, including his attorney — Joe does not plead spousal privilege nor does he take the 5th when he testifies before Babygate.

10) Zena is ready for a second child but Joe is not.

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Subject Line: Eden De Ruse-Moore Producer/Manager

What I learned today is that the role of the manager is to have a journey and our job as professional writers is to bring our scripts along for the ride and let them lead the way.

How will you present yourself and your project to the producer?
I’ll present myself as a professional, who’s ultimate goal is to get a film made. Sharing that my current project aligns with films in their wheelhouse which they’ve produced. Stating that my current project Yankee Doodle Daddy is a high concept script and by design it is similar to the box office hit film, Barbie. Which makes it enticing to investors. Also leveraging the fact that the story will relate to a global audience means it will attract domestic and international distribution.

How will you present yourself and your project to the manager?
I’ll present myself as an individual who is highly collaborative, and share my collaborative track record. I’d also mention that I have been involved in paid writing gigs in the past and I’m open to more in the future. Taking into account their skills as a manager I’d work with them on a strategic development plan beginning with my current project Yankee Doodle Daddy, a high concept screenplay. I’d continue to bring in marketable features so I can develop my career and become the next “go to” writer for the studios.

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Eden De Ruse-Moore: (1) Unique=High Concept / (2) Similarity to a box-office success.

What I learned doing this assignment is that it is best NOT to make your pitch a hodgepodge and hooks MUST create curiosity.

Yankee Doodle Daddy – Logline:
When a former Yankee goes from dugouts to diapers he’s determined to prove to a nation that he’s an ALL Star stay-at-home Dad, while his wife the first female president, leads the greatest nation on earth.

1. In Yankee Doodle Daddy: The President finds out she’s pregnant on Inauguration Day, and tells her spouse the news as she’s about to be sworn in, (that’s unique). Given the situation, Operation First Fetus is to remain confidential until the State of the Union but when there’s a leak – the White House needs to spin it. In my pitch, I pose the question, does POTUS get maternity leave? Why does her husband, the former Yankee not want to hire a Nanny? Will a Senate Investigation (coined Babygate) have legs and lead to an impeachment? How will perpetual cut-throat politics collide with parenting?

2. Joe’s entire adult life has been based on one thing: being a Yankee. But as the First Daddy he experiences a crisis of identity, and later a reckoning of his own masculinity and personal flaws. Similar to Barbie, (box office success). Think Ken in the White House – Joe is known to most as a dumb jock, which gives him anxiety, and he’s often criticized for: “not being in touch with his feminine side.” Yet while POTUS runs the nation he’s devoted to all things baby; 24/7. Joe doesn’t fit in anywhere. I’d add to the pitch that the media reacts to his baby blunders every chance they get.

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Lesson 1
1. Genre – Dramedy. Title – Yankee Doodle Daddy
When the first female president finds out on Inauguration Day that she’s pregnant, her spouse a former Yankee takes on all things baby, while an entire nation weighs in on his parenting.
2. In one or two sentences, tell us what you think is most attractive about your story. With a pregnant POTUS, this is a high concept screenplay. Since it is told from her husband’s POV; a former Yankee ballplayer, he is a true fish out of water and comedy ensues with plenty of politics and baseball.
3. Tell us which you will target FIRST — I’d target an actor’s production company because he or she can add more credibility & momentum to the project. My screenplay has a strong male lead and as for the female, while not the protagonist the POTUS character makes for a desirable and compelling character.
4. Answer the question “What I learned today is…?” Marketing is meant to be fun, clever words are unnecessary and it’s important to find the open door in the right market . I also discovered that I’m clueless when it comes to reading instructions online.
Is this where I copy and paste my assignments? It doesn’t look like the page per the youtube video.
Title: (Eden De Ruse-Moore) Project and Market (Lesson 1)

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I agree to the terms of this release form.

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Turnaround, been there.

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Hello,
My nam is Eden
I’ve written 13 scripts
I’d like to be able to build a list of contacts made up of the right power players who can say yes to one of my feature projects.
I’ve done volunteer work in Nicaragua setting up water purfication systems in local schools.

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Fantastic way you described your concept. You nailed the elevator pitch.

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This is super. I like how you used your hooks and kept your query concise, after reading it I wanted to know more.

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Hi Hunt,
I have not seen or heard any upeates.
Eden