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Eclipse Neilson – what I learned is to make sure to consider the audience's experience and help them relate.
What is your profound truth?

SECOND BREATH

We all have a moment when our life’s meaning is revealed.

Every one of us experiences a moment when our life’s purpose is revealed.

Or no soul is insignificant

2.What is the change your movie will cause with an audience?
-The audience will see how their life journey has a purpose in healing others.

3.What is your Entertainment Vehicle that you will tell this story through?

A Woman’s hospital (infusion room) frozen in time filled with angels and spirits.

[Eclipse Neilson]

I am Eclipse Neilson I am an optioned screenwriter, an award winning author and have six scripts and am dedidcated to addressing discrimination in all forms
,and animal and environmental rights.

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I Eclipse Neilson agree to the releaase form
GROUP RELEASE FORM
As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.
This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

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I Eclipse Neilson agree to the confidentiality agreement.
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.

2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea. I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.

3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.

4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.

5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.

6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.
This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

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Eclipse Neilson Producer/Manager
How will you present yourself and your project to the producer? –
My name is Eclipse Neilson and I am an award winning author, optioned screen writer with one of my scripts now in preproduction. All my scrips are dedicated to current issues in our times.
My newest script is TIS TIME is a SCI/FI Drama about a World War II orphan with mystical abilities and a complex genius perspective, who is sent by the Universe to find the lost Heart of Humanity before its too late

How will you present yourself and your project to the manager?
My name is Eclipse Neilson and All my scrips are dedicated to current issues in our times so as to reach a wide spread audience. I am an award wining author , optioned screenwriter with one script in preproduction. I have five full features and one pilot available in the making.

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Eclipse Neilson Marketable Components

What I have learn first express what you feel about the script give that and summery and more to AI and see what it thinks because it is marketing not creative writing and AI is great for this!
Title: Tis Time

Genre: Drama / Sci-Fi
Concept: A Words War II war orphan with mystical abilities and a complex genius perspective is destined to help save humanity from destroying itself.
Logline : Amidst the chaos of World War II, a young orphan with mystical abilities must save humanity from destruction, navigating a treacherous journey across mystical realms guided by Mother Earth, while confronting personal demons and formidable adversaries
10 COMPONENTS OF MARKETABILITY
I chose any of these- but 2,3,4,6,9

Unique Concept: &quot ;Tis Time" offers a fresh and original concept blending drama and sci-fi elements, which can attract audiences seeking innovative storytelling.

Compelling Protagonist: Robyn Stir is a multidimensional character, a war orphan with mystical abilities and a complex psyche, providing a captivating focal point for the audience's engagement.

Emotional Depth: The script delves into profound emotional themes such as loss, resilience, and the search for identity, resonating with audiences on a deep level and fostering empathy for the characters.

Intriguing World-Building: The inclusion of magical realms, time portals, and cosmic elements creates a rich and immersive world that viewers can escape into, adding layers of intrigue and wonder to the narrative.

Universal Themes: Themes of love, sacrifice, and the struggle against corruption resonate universally, making the story relatable to audiences of diverse backgrounds and interests.

Timeliness: The story's exploration of humanity's uncertain future and the urgent need for redemption and salvation is timely, tapping into contemporary concerns about environmental degradation and societal discord.

First of its Kind: Being the first script to explore the concept of a World War II war orphan with mystical abilities and a mission to save humanity adds a unique selling point, generating buzz and interest in the industry.

Ultimate Stakes: The high stakes involved in saving humanity from self-destruction and retrieving the lost pieces of an ancient amulet imbue the story with tension and urgency, keeping viewers on the edge of their seats.

Wide Audience Appeal: With its blend of drama, fantasy, and sci-fi elements, "Tis Time" has the potential to appeal to a broad audience demographic, from lovers of epic adventures to fans of intimate character-driven stories.

Great Roles for Actors: The script offers complex and compelling roles for actors, attracting attention from bankable stars eager to sink their teeth into meaty characters and showcase their range and talent.

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Title: Eclipse Neilson Project and Market

1. Genre: Drama / Sci-Fi
Concept. A war orphan with mystical abilities and an autistic genius, is destined to help save humanity from destroying itself.
2..
TIS TIME weaves a mystical/sci-fi approach to saving humanity from destroying our planet and itself in a era where tragically youth has loss a sense of wonderment and any hope for a safe future as climate change and threats of a new world war emerges.
3.FIRST producers, they have the way to open doors first and have connections.
4. Answer the question “What I learned today is…?”
Make it strong – keep it simple.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Pilot Structure

What I’ve learned it is still hard to simplify.

Teaser:

Essence: As the Council of Universal Beings gathers to decide humanity’s fate, they follow the haunting sound of a weeping child through a time portal. There, they discover Robyn, a young World War II orphan, cradled in the arms of Om Ma (Mother Earth), who pleads for humanity’s survival.

Turning Point: In a moment of revelation, young Robyn demonstrates her magical origins by shaping a heart-shaped constellation with a portal, causing the Council to realize they have found the One they have been seeking.

Act 1: Essence: The Council of Universal Beings convenes with Om Ma (Mother Earth), seeking humanity’s ultimate rescue. She warns them of the lost sacred amulet of Time, holding the universe’s secret codes is still hidden on Earth somewhere and is capable of devastating all if misused. Meanwhile, Wing, the Sparrow King and keeper of heart songs, anxiously anticipates his blessed soulmate Robyn’s return to heaven, believing she holds Earth’s salvation.

Turning Point/Midpoint: In a decisive move, the Council selects World War II as the era to intervene in humanity’s history, seeking the individual who could potentially save all beings on Earth. This leads them to young Robyn Stir, an autistic genius, living with her beloved mother, Astrea a psychic healer, who nurtures Robyn’s ancestral gifts, shaping her into the Heart Whisperer.

Act 2: Essence: The life of Robyn and her Mother the daily teachings and deep bond.

Turning Point: Robyns mother is killed by gunshots in a battle near their village.Wing returns to Earth to take Robyn his beloved soulmate home to the heavens.

Act 3: Essence: Robyn and Wing as young adult lovers live a life of ethereal beauty in the heavens.

Turning Point:The Council of Universal Beings announce to Robyn she must leave Wing behind and return to earth to carry out her mission to find the lost Heart of Humanity. Heart broken Robyn follows Om Ma through the portal back to earth knowing Wing can’t incarnate with her this lifetime.

Act 4: Essence: Robyn is adopted by Frances and Winthrop Cunningham – an affluent American family who plan to groom her into high society. A stark difference from her peasant life with her mother.

Robyn bonds with Winthrop but deeply feels like a stranger in a strange land with Frances until she discovers Om Ma living in the woods surrounding her new home.

Turning point: Om Ma begins training Robyn warning her there are many demons on earth and she is here for a purpose.

Act 5: Essence: Robyn now a young teen has bonded with Om Ma and is beginning to rebel against France’s desire to groom her as a debutante as she teaches her the unspoken rules and expectations of upper class society.

Lock In: Robyn discovers that Walter Burdock, the wealthy next door neighbor is plotting to buy the woods where her beloved Om Ma resides, so as to build a mall. She over hears him saying to a land surveyor that he knows the Sacred Amulet of time is buried somewhere in those woods. Robyn’s powerful ancient warrior aspect begins to simmer in her heart as she fears the loss of her beloved guardian Om Ma.

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Eclipse Neilson -Big Picture Components (

What I’ve learn to continue to simplify a very complicated TV series.

THE HEART WHISPERER

SERIES INFO:

• World: Magical universal patterns , time portals and mystical beings around Mother Earth, contrasting with Robyn’s adopted family’s high society culture and rules.

• Main mystery: Finding the Heart of Humanity- where all comes together and realigns with the soul of the universe.

• Impossible Goal: Find the common thread within the Heart of Humanity and all beings throughout history.
• Main Conflict: Hatred, war and discrimination destroying the vulnerable ones who have no voice in the world.
• Second Mystery: Robyn and Wing’s ancient love story and how it must play out when kept apart from each other on this cosmic mission.
• Season 1 Arc: When Robyn realizes it is her guardian Mother Earth she must save first before she can accomplish her destiny to help save humanity.
• Season 1 Protagonist Internal Journey: from a broken hearted young war orphan -a stranger in a strange land to accepting her cosmic destiny as The Heart Whisper to find the Heart and Soul of Humanity.

• PILOT INFO:

  • Pilot Conflict: Robyn loses everything -birth mother, home and her soulmate as she confronts hatred around her and rescues the broken hearts of the Lost Ones
  • Main Characters Introduced: Robyn Stir , Om Ma (Mother Earth), Winthrop, Frances, Wing , Walter Burdock
  • Inciting Incident of Season 1: Robyn loses her mother to war and is tasked by the Council of Universal Beings to find the Heart of Humanity, only to discover that it is the broken heart of her beloved guardian, Mother Earth, that she must save first.

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Eclipse Neilson -Writing With Intrigue

What I learned doing this assignment is using this formula will be great for writing the script too.

• A. Establish something shocking and point to the terrible things it could mean.
• Wing desperately wants to be alive and with Robyn but can’t in this lifetime, he struggles to not have her die so he can bring her back to heaven.

• B. Strong statement; question about something underhanded beneath the surface.
• Wing must chose between helping Robyn commit suicide or protecting her.
• C. Question that points to hidden agendas, hidden identity, conspiracy, etc..
• Angry at the universe he struggles with taking power into his own hands.
• D. Character 1 is convinced/worried/wondering that Character 2 has done _____________.

Wing worries whether Robyn will abandon him if he is not able to incarnate in this life time.

• E. But maybe it is all wrong.

But what if he is wrong and Robyn fails her mission and humanity is lost.

• F. A Pattern that Leads to Future Consequences
• If he chooses his needs over humanity’s all will be lost.
• G. If he does ________________, that means ___Intrigue_____.
• If he remains a presence in her life – she might be able to save the heart of humanity and her beloved Om Ma -mother earth.
• H. State the mystery.
• As an old soul having travelled with Robyn for many life times he must trust the path.
• I. Should be/could be _______, but it is even worse.
• Maybe he should rescue her- because it looks like humanity is failing.
• J. Intense language.
• Wing froze in the moment of making the biggest decisions of many lifetimes-whether to rescue Robyn or let the universe takes it’s course.

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Eclipse Neilson Investigating Your Show

What I’ve learn is to explore and give time for the ideas to show up.

Use in TV Pitch Bible. Shortened concept. For Francis -I developed her character bit more of a relatable side that will play out for Robyn in the upcoming seasons.

Use in Episodes. Francis and Robyn

Francis educates Robyn with children’s classic where she hid her childhood secret dream of becoming a queen like in the fairytales.One day she reads the old classic little mermaid triggering Robyn’s love and yearning for wing and will show up in a later season and relates to Oma’s need to be returned to the sea.

For Robyn- The trips to the museums and Robyn’s love of egyptology leads to Robyn and Wings mystical origins and past life and secrets of the cosmic clock.

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Eclipse Neilson -show summary

What I ‘ve learn that I spin quickly into a confused perfectionism of ideas and then must go back and keep it simple.

Summary structure =Full 8 episodes

1. Set up — a child of World War II resting in the arms of her mother under the stars listening to her teachings but looses her mother to gun fire and is sent through a portal to the Council of universal Beings

2. Twist/Hook- They have a cosmic mission for her and she is sent back to Earth to find the heart of humanity and is adopted in to an affluent family.

3. Layer beneath surface – Major Empathy / Distress

She discovers in her lonely search there is both beauty, loss, fear and evil within the humans she encounters .

4. Twist/Hook

It is her beloved guardian Om Ma – Mother earth -she needs to save first before she can find the heart of humanity

5. Impossible to solve conflict or major mystery.

But how can she do that when so many do not feel for Mother Earth’s heart.

6. Final Hook into the Series – Extreme Dramatic Question Om Ma’s health deteriorates, and Winthrop abandons her.

Walter a ruthless Business mogul has bought the woods to destroy it. . Om Ma reminds her of the mission’s importance, and begs her to bring her through a portal to the ocean to heal.

Twist/Hook = A single sentence or question (10 words or less) that is surprising or shocking, demanding the reader’s attention and causing them to read every word of the summary.

As bulldozers approach the forest, Robyn’s power surges. Weeping she carries Om Ma/mother Earth in her arms through the portal, the forest creatures follow not knowing if this is the end or a new beginning. The Cosmic clock’s ticking warns of time running short.

Format/genre = Drama /magical realism

Concept = Robyn Stir, a war orphan with mystical abilities and an autistic genius, is sent back to Earth by the universe on a mission to find the Heart of Humanity. While seeking, she stumbles upon a profound realization and interconnection—the key to the heart of humanity lies in first saving her beloved Guardian of the forest, Om Ma – known as Mother Earth.

Summary -Rough draft

Under the night skies of World War II, sheltered in the arms of her mother, young Robyn absorbs the ancient teachings of her heritage as a heart whisperer. Their precious moment shatters with sudden violence. Fleeing the chaos, her mother succumbs to gunfire, leaving Robyn alone, weeping over her body.

The Universe intervenes, sending Wing, her soulmate, to guide her through a portal to the heavens. They have a mission for her and Robyn must leave Wing and return to Earth to find the Heart of Humanity and recover the lost Amulet of Time, a cosmic clock with supreme power.

Robyn is adopted by the Cunningham family. She bonds with Winthrop, her adoptive father—a social recluse—and clashes with Francis, who wants to groom her as a debutante. Meanwhile, Om Ma imparts the interconnectedness of humanity’s heart and the forest’s survival,

Walter Burdock, a ruthless business mogul, wants to buy and build on Om Ma’s beloved forest, He knows the amulet is there.He will do anything to obtain it. Robyn’s purpose crystallizes – to confront humanity’s heartlessness

She discovers Winthrop’s secret involvement with a man, threatening his safety and as the magical beings in the forest unveil themselves , Robyn finds Wing – her soulmate but he’s only a ghostly memory. Their hearts break as they yearns for each other.

Om Ma’s health deteriorates, and Winthrop abandons her. Walter has bought the woods. Om Ma reminds her of the mission’s importance, begs her to bring her through a portal to the ocean to heal. As bulldozers approach the forest, Robyn’s power surges.as she carries Om Ma in her arms through the portal, not knowing if this is the end or a new beginning. The Cosmic clock’s ticking warns of time running short.

AI Summary

Under the vast night skies of World War II, young Robyn rests in the loving embrace of her mother, absorbing the ancient teachings of the stars. However, the tranquility is shattered as gunfire claims her mother, propelling Robyn through a cosmic portal to the Council of Universal Beings.

Here unfolds the twist—the cosmic beings reveal a mission for Robyn. She is sent back to Earth, adopted into the affluent Cunningham family, and tasked with finding the elusive Heart of Humanity. Yet, beneath the surface of her journey lies a layer of major empathy and distress. In her quest, she encounters the beauty, loss, fear, and evil within the humans she crosses paths with.

A subsequent twist intensifies the narrative—Robyn learns that before she can locate the Heart of Humanity, she must save her beloved guardian, Om Ma, Mother Earth. The impossible-to-solve conflict emerges—how can she achieve this monumental task when so many are indifferent to Mother Earth’s heart?

The series reaches its gripping climax with an extreme dramatic question. Om Ma’s health deteriorates, and Winthrop, her adoptive father, abandons her. The ruthless business mogul Walter buys the woods with the intent to destroy it. Om Ma urgently reminds Robyn of the mission’s importance, imploring her to bring her through a portal to the ocean for healing.

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Eclipse Neilson Lesson 5: Engaging Episode Descriptions

“What I learned doing this assignment is…that I have longer descriptions for now but will shorten later?”

EPISODE 1

• Hook/Intrigue: Robyn’s Mother shares her mystical genius and love to her 8 year old daughter.
• Main Character journey: Robyn listens with her heart and will become the seeker of the heart of humanity later.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: War breaks out and Robyn’s mother is shot as they flee-
• Action/Reaction:heartbroken Robyn won’t let go of her mother’s grasp.
• Cliffhanger: Robyn is sent through a mystical portal
• EPISODE 2
• Hook/Intrigue: Council of Universal Beings and the heavenly ways
• Main Character journey: She is sent back to earth with a cosmic mission to find the heart within the soul of humanity.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: Must return to earth ,heal her shattered heart while finding her power as the heart seeker.
• Action/Reaction:She resist wants to stay within the arms of Wing her soulmate.
• Cliffhanger: She returns to earth as a 12 year old war orphan being adopted into a high society family wanting to groom her to become a debutante.
• EPISODE 3
• Hook/Intrigue: The loving bond of Robyn with her adopted father who teaches her art and his love of the woods.
• Main Character journey: Her journey teaches her trusting the heart and another human.
• Major Challenge/Conflict:She discovers that he is secretly gay and having an affair with the gardener.
• Action/Reaction: struggles with the secret, avoids him.
• Cliffhanger: Draws in her secret sketch book a heart and names of Winthrop and the gardener claiming them as a part of the heart of humanity. Francis walks by hinting she will discover the secret.

EPISODE 4

• Hook/Intrigue: Om Ma is a magical shapeshifter that is committed to Robyn’s mission.
• Main Character journey: Robyn longs for the love of her dead mother and Om Ma fits the role.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: Robyn begins to deeply bond with her which triggers a fear of loss.
• Action/Reaction: Questions if Om Ma will be there always.
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EPISODE 5

• Hook/Intrigue: Francis and Robyn show their hidden side in an argument about cotillion.
• Main Character journey:Robyn shows her out of control angry feelings and becomes vulnerable to someone she dislikes.
• Major Challenge/Conflict:Both Francis and Robyn must learn about each other’s secret feelings.
• Action/Reaction: Francis clueless on how to love , attempts to help Robyn – Robyn must see Francis hidden vulnerable heart
• Cliffhanger: Robyn adds a drawing of Francis heart as part of the puzzle to find the heart of humanity.

EPISODE 6

• Hook/Intrigue: Robyn is now a teenager -wild Hippie
• Main Character journey: Robyn has secretly fallen in love with Wing
• Major Challenge/Conflict: She attempts to kiss him
• Action/Reaction: He withdraws and disappears which triggers her
• Cliffhanger: Wing is talking to Om ma and we discover he is only a ghostly memory in Robyn’s mind and can’t be a real human in this lifetime.

EPISODE 7

• Hook/Intrigue: Walter Burdock is haunted by demons and his murdered father’s ghost.
• Main Character journey: Walter must steal Robyn’s forest- Robyn sees his demons and must go deep into his dark heart.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: Robyn tells Walter she knows his secret that he witnessed the murder as a young boy.
• Action/Reaction: He runs to his mother in jail to seek the answer where the ancient amulet is hidden.
• Cliffhanger:His mother becomes comatose.

EPISODE 8

• Hook/Intrigue: Everything is lost- Walter has bought the forest and Om Ma is ill.
• Main Character journey: Robyn feels lost ready to give up.
• Major Challenge/Conflict: Winthrop leaves a good bye letter saying he is setting himself free and running away with his lover
• Action/Reaction: In tears of rage she runs to the forest where Om Ma helps her rise in her power, as she faces the bulldozer to tear down the forest.
• Cliffhanger:She carries fragile Om Ma through a portal to find the shore that Om Ma dreams of returning to- knowing this is either the beginning of the healing or the end.

Episode 1: “Heaven and War – Robyn’s Beginnings”

Young Robyn’s life is shattered as she learns mystical teachings under the night sky, in the arms of her mother when a sudden war battle breaks out. As they try to escape into the forest, her mother falls to gunfire. Alone and frightened, Wing, her soulmate of lifetimes, appears and brings her through a time portal where the Council of Universal Beings awaits. The cosmic clock begins ticking.

Episode 2: “The Return – A Mission on Earth”

The Council of Universal Beings reveals Robyn’s mission on Earth, telling her she is destined to find the heart of humanity. Robyn resists leaving Wing, but guardian Om Ma leads her back through the time portal, where Robyn finds herself as a war orphan being adopted into a wealthy family.

Episode 3: “All So Strange – Bonding with Winthrop”

Robyn bonds with her adopted father, Winthrop, a reclusive artist who shares a love for the forest with her. She discovers that he is secretly gay and having an affair with the gardener. This sparks curiosity about the human heart and her mission. She gains a deeper understanding of humanity and grows aware of the looming hatred directed towards Winthrop.

Episode 4: “May Time Heal All – Om Ma’s Teachings”

Om Ma returns and helps Robyn discover her heritage as a heart whisperer. Memories of her mother’s love resurface as their bond deepens, triggering a fear of losing Om Ma forever.

Episode 5: “The Good, The Bad, and The Broken Fairytale – Frances’ Adoption”

Frances attempts to groom Robyn into society, leading to an angry clash. Robyn reveals her suppressed rage, and Frances confesses her shame of her broken heart – hinting that she possibly knows Winthrop’s fair hinting at her attraction to Walter Burdock, a business mogul with a penchant for deforestation.

Episode 6: “Forever My Heart My Dear – Robyn’s Ghostly Friend”

Robyn, now a teen hippie, falls in love with Wing but discovers he is only a spirit ghost. Wing desperately wants to be alive and with Robyn but can’t in this lifetime, struggling to bring her back to heaven. They must choose between Robyn’s destiny or their love for each other.

Episode 7: “Secrets Behind the Broken Heart of Evil – Walter Burdock’s Haunting Past”

Robyn confronts Walter, attempting to stop his destructive plans to buy her forest. A psychic journey into Walter’s haunted past reveals a lost diamond amulet hidden in the forest by his mother, triggering unforeseen consequences and gives Robyn greater insight but also fear.

Episode 8: “The War Between Heart and Soul – Love Over Rage”

Facing heartbreak and impending destruction, Robyn receives a letter from Winthrop saying he is setting himself free and leaving with his lover. Her trust is broken again – Om Ma has grown ill and begs to be returned to the ocean to heal. Walter’s attempt to steal and destroy the forest is now met with Robyn’s unleashed power, fueled by repressed rage. As a bulldozer approaches, she confronts humanity’s heartless destruction. Choosing love over rage, she carries Om Ma towards a portal, followed by the animals. The cosmic clock ticks on, marking the beginning or end as the first tree falls. Will Robyn fulfill her destiny?

AI EPISODES

EPISODE 1: BETWEEN HEAVEN AND WAR – EIGHT YEAR OLD ROBYN’S BEGINNINGS

Under the night sky, Robyn’s idyllic childhood shatters in war’s onslaught. Fleeing through magical portals, she clings to her dying mother. A mysterious guide, Wing, leads her through a tree portal, leaving an ancient spiral mark on Robyn’s hand, setting the stage for her cosmic journey.

EPISODE 2: THE RETURN – THE WAYS OF THE UNIVERSE

As an adult, Robyn resists leaving her soulmate, Wing, in the tranquil afterlife. The Council of Universal Beings compels her to return to Earth. Guided by Om Ma, she discovers her mission: to find the heart of humanity. With a diamond amulet, Robyn steps into a new life, unaware of the cosmic clock ticking.

EPISODE 3: ALL SO STRANGE – MEETING WINTHROP

Robyn, now 12, is adopted by the Cunninghams. Bonding with Winthrop, she senses magic in the forest. A mysterious glowing woman captivates her. Discovering Winthrop’s secret affair, Robyn sketches a heart, hinting at the interconnectedness of humanity. The cosmic clock continues ticking.

EPISODE 4: MAY TIME HEAL ALL – BONDING WITH OM MA

Robyn experiences a tree’s loving embrace and encounters Om Ma, who imparts mystical wisdom. Learning to hear whispers in hearts, Robyn grapples with Om Ma’s enigmatic presence. With the cosmic clock ticking, Robyn begins her transformative journey into the magic her mother once promised.

EPISODE 5: THE GOOD, THE BAD AND THE BROKEN FAIRYTALE – BECOMING FRANCES’ ADOPTED CHILD

Frances struggles to connect with Robyn, resorting to Cinderella’s tale. Robyn, sensing Frances’ hidden pain, sketches a broken heart in a glass slipper. Unveiling the secrets behind Frances’ desires, Robyn begins to understand the intricate threads weaving humanity’s collective heart.

EPISODE 6: FOREVER MY HEART MY DEAR – ROBYN’S SECRET FRIEND WING

As a teen, Robyn’s bond with Wing deepens, but a revelation shatters her world. Wing, a ghostly memory, reveals his ephemeral existence. Om Ma hints at a mysterious solution. The cosmic clock ticks, marking the delicate balance between love and ethereal connections.

EPISODE 7: SECRETS BEHIND THE BROKEN HEART OF EVIL – WALTER BURDOCK HAUNTINGS AND DESIRES

Robyn confronts Walter, delving into his haunted past. Unraveling buried memories, she discovers a tragic tale of love, loss, and a stolen amulet. The cosmic clock ticks relentlessly, pushing Robyn to expose the secrets entwined with the forest and Walter’s malevolent plans.

EPISODE 8: THE WAR BETWEEN HEART AND SOUL – WHEN EVIL MEETS ANCIENT POWER

Winthrop’s departure and Om Ma’s ailing condition push Robyn to a breaking point. Fueled by rage against humanity’s heartlessness and a bulldozer’s approach, Robyn carries Om Ma towards a portal. The cosmic clock ticks louder as the fate of humanity and Earth’s soul teeters on the edge of destruction or renewal.

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Eclipse Neilson Lesson 3: Easy Way to Five Seasons

What I’ve learn today is that I can trust when I actually start writing the story, new ideas will come through and lead me forward. Right now it all is a bit too much with many intwined pieces. I’ve combined my ideas and AI sentences. After some work with Ai and my original intent I came up with a more emotional series- closer to what I want. But still working on it.

Season 1: “Orphan of the Cosmos”

A. High Concept or major hook of the season: Sent by the Council of Universal Beings to save the soul of humanity, Robyn Stir, a broken hearted war orphan with an autistic genius embarks on a mystical mission to uncover the heart of humanity. However, her journey takes an unexpected turn as she must first thwart Walter Burdock, a ruthless corporate mogul, from buying her forest and destroying the home of her beloved guardian Om Ma Ma (Mother Earth)

B. Big Picture Season Arc/Journey: Robyn’s cosmic journey involves protecting her home’s forest, learning about trust and human nature while thwarting a ruthless corporate mogul, and fulfilling Om Mama’s secret dream to return to the ocean to rest and heal or maybe die.

C. Main Conflict: The ruthless mogul’s intent to destroy the forest to build a mall and his quest for a legendary diamond necklace believed to be buried there ,sparks the clash between cosmic forces and human greed.

D. Main Mystery/Layers: 1.The mysterious origins of the diamond necklace 2. How the necklace is connected to Robyn and Walter Burdock. 3. Why Om Mama wants to return to the ocean. 4. Robyn’s connection to Om Mama 5. The unfolding cosmic and personal layers in her journey with her ghostly soulmate Wing. Her deep bond with her adopted father Winthrop and how it will ultimately bring her to rise in her power.

E. Cliffhanger: When all seems lost , hoping to find the heart of humanity, Robyn and Om Mama along with a few creatures of the forest step through a time portal , transporting them to a distant era, leaving viewers intrigued about the next phase of their cosmic adventure.

Season 2: “Echoes of Love”

A. High Concept or major hook of the season: Robyn explores the fractured heart of humanity through the lens of true love in the 1960-70’s, facing societal challenges alongside her soul companion Wing now an ancient spirit of a merman.

B. Big Picture Season Arc/Journey: Robyn’s mission to find the heart of humanity intensifies as she navigates societal inequities and experiences her own romantic tale and sense of being different -longing for her true love Wing.

C. Main Conflict: Robyn’s fight to believe in true love as it slowly gets loss among the demands of society, and her need to follow her destiny to find the heart of humanity comes up against the pressure of wanting to give up all that hse knows to join hi in the ocean.

D. Main Mystery/Layers: 1. The mysterious world beneath the surface both in the ocean and how it connects to Robyn’s mission. 2. The significance of the diamond amulet, Robyn’s past lives . Om Mama’s continuous guidance for Robyn’s journey with Wing and how it is connected to her mission.

E. Cliffhanger: Fueled by true love, Robyn takes a daring leap off the cliff into the water to join Wing, embracing a destiny intertwined with the mysterious world beneath the surface, leaving viewers eager to unravel the next chapter.

Season 3: “Eternal Sands”

A. High Concept or major hook of the season: Transported to ancient Egypt, Robyn embodies Isis, and the origin of the diamond amulet is revealed, setting the stage for a cosmic battle.

B. Big Picture Season Arc/Journey: The battle of greed and war unfolds among humanity and the gods, with Robyn hiding the diamond amulet in the past, guided by the transformed Om Mama.

C. Main Conflict: The cosmic battle between humanity and the gods, the revelation of the amulet’s origin, and the quest to find its missing half.

D. Main Mystery/Layers: 1.The symbolic roles of the characters as gods and goddesses. 2 The broken amulet origin .3 The connection between past and future.

E. Cliffhanger: Robyn receives a broken amulet from Om Mama a Egyptian Goddess, indicating she must find the other half hidden in the heart of humanity in the future 2023, leaving viewers intrigued by the cosmic connection.

Season 4: “Shadows of Tomorrow”

A. High Concept or major hook of the season: Set in 2023/2024, Robyn faces contemporary challenges as racism, hatred, and war threaten the planet, and she must gather allies to counteract the threats.

B. Big Picture Season Arc/Journey: Robyn returns to her forest, battles Walter Burdock now a ruthless powerful political cult leader. She brings Om mama back to her old forest to help renew it and expresses her deep love for Om Mama and commitment while gathering allies to counteract modern threats.

C. Main Conflict: Robyn’s confrontation with brutal Walter Burdock, now a political leader aligned with his big business ready to destroy all in cluding Om ma who he sees as his greatest enemy.

D. Main Mystery/Layers: Unraveling the contemporary threats, the transformation of characters, and the role of allies in Robyn’s mission.

E. Cliffhanger: The world teeters on the brink between annihilation and redemption, as the cosmic forces observe with motives veiled in mystery, setting the stage for an intense and mysterious climax.

Season 5: “Infinity’s Threshold”

A. High Concept or major hook of the season: In the riveting finale, Robyn faces Walter in the heart of humanity, seeking the amulet’s missing half for salvation, as the world teeters on the brink between annihilation and redemption.

B. Big Picture Season Arc/Journey: The final battle unfolds as Robyn and allies confront Walter, and the completion of the amulet opens a portal to the unknown.

C. Main Conflict: The epic battle between Robyn and Walter, the magic of the amulet, and the unveiling of unseen forces and ancient cosmic secrets with in he heart of humanity.

D. Main Mystery/Layers: 1.The motives of the Council of Beings 2. The cosmos’s greatest secret behind the amulet. 3.The enigmatic journey beyond reality’s veil. 4. Robyn knows many of the answers lay in the heart of each human

E. Cliffhanger: The pulsating portal raises a question: What lies beyond reality’s veil? What will happen to earth? Robyn takes the first step into the unknown,(the future) leaving viewers on the edge, eager for answers to cosmic mysteries.

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Eclipse Neilson- Main Character Description

What I’ve learned is ideas keep popping into my mind when I begin to give order and a vessel for the characters to develop and that Ai is good in helping me clean up a sentence when I ask. I also realized I had to make it more about the emotional theme and am changing the working title to Om MaMa’s Heart

1. Robyn Stir

Who is the character? ROBYN STIR

Role in the show? Protagonist age range (7yr-20yr)

Noteworthy traits War. Orphan, psychic healer, mystical powers, autistic genius, true empath.

Intriguing history: Child of War witnessed her mother die in a battle -couldn’t save her and had to let go to save herself in her last life time.Now sent by the council of universal beings to find the heart and soul of humanity against all odds.

Intrigue? Mystery? She was sent by the Council of Universal being to find the heart/soul of humanity before it is too late . She befriends the Old One-Om Ma Ma in the forest and finds her lost “mother love” through their connection -She realizes that Mother love rest in the core of the heart of humanity .

How do they support or drive the conflict with others? The Old One- OM MA MA is a very human emotional character who is secretly Mother Earth embodying human form while Robyn is learning to become a spiritual warrior seeking the heart and soul of humanity but realizes she must save Om Ma Ma first before it is too late.

Irony — Opposites or paradoxes that exist with the character- She is a motherless child representing both mystical beings without a voice and the lost children of the world witnessing their future being destroyed. Despite being perceived as a misfit with communication challenges, she must paradoxically serve as their voice.

Opposing agendas/etc. that naturally causes conflict with other characters – Walter Burdock (40yr) is a ruthless mega million builder who wants to find a diamond necklace hidden in the forest and will destroy the forest to get what he needs and Robyn is in his way.

Unpredictable? Outburst of screams and rage when triggered by memories of war set .

Intriguing relationship with one or more characters Robyn and the Old One-Om Ma Ma and Wing (The sparrow King)a spirit ghost in this lifetime who has been her soul mate through many life times and Winthrop her adopted father the only human she trust in her life now.

(Start)In a captivating fusion of drama and magical realism, war orphan Robyn Stir, endowed with mystical powers and autistic genius, is sent back to Earth by the Council of Universal Beings to rescue humanity’s soul and mend her shattered heart.

(Middle) Haunted by the tragic memory of her mother’s death in a battle, Robyn finds solace in the quiet presence of her upper class adopted father, Winthrop and forms a poignant, deep loving connection with Om Ma Ma, a human manifestation of Mother Earth, who resides in a magical portal within the forest.

(End) As Robyn delves into the secrets of magical portals and the interconnectedness of the universe, nature, and the human soul within Om Ma’s nurturing love as she fends off her pain, which is always near by as Walter Burdock, a ruthless mega-millionaire business mogul haunted by his past demons, plots to buy and destroy the precious forest to build a mall, introducing an unpredictable layer of irony that underscores the contrast between the vulnerable mystical realm and humanity’s often heartless destructive ambitions. The question is will Robyn find her power within the most unlikely moment and place and save all that she loves? Or Will the greed and hatred of humanity explode, destroying all?

2.WALTER BURDOCK

Role in the show: Antagonist, skilled businessman.

Noteworthy traits: Ruthless pursuit of power, void of empathy, haunted by childhood demons.

Intriguing history: Witnessed his father’s murdered by his mother and driven by his ghost to find the ancient diamond amulet buried in the forest. Inherited millions and wants more millions.

Intrigue? Mystery: Chilling void of empathy and insatiable desire for power creates an aura of mystery around Walter Burdock drive to find the diamond amulet..

How do they support or drive the conflict with others?: Deceptive and driven by a ruthless pursuit of power, Walter Burdock’s actions and hidden agendas entwine with the fate of Robyn’s enchanted forest and her quest, while sparking conflicts with those who stand in his way.

Irony — Opposites or paradoxes that exist with the character: Successful businessman/mafia godfather type harboring a deep-seated fear of women.

Opposing agendas/etc. that naturally cause conflict with other characters: His pursuit of the diamond amulet clashes with Robyn Stir’s mission to save the enchanted forest, plus her need to find the heart of humanity sets the stage for intense conflicts.

Unpredictable?: Willing to kill anyone in his way, Walter Burdock’s unpredictable nature adds an element of suspense and danger to the unfolding drama.

Intriguing relationship with one or more characters: Lies and deceit characterize Walter’s relationships, except with his incarcerated mother, the one person with whom he exhibits a semblance of empathy amid a sea of manipulation.

(Start) Walter Burdock. A ruthless businessman with a chilling void of empathy and a relentless pursuit of power emerges as his his story unfolds , filled with demons and the over bearing ghost of his father, who was murdered by his, now incarcerated, mother. Ironically she is the only one he ever shows a semblance of empathy when he secretly visits her in jail on a weekly bases.

(Middle)Walter Burdock becomes the catalyst for turmoil when he plots to buy the Robyn’s forest from her adopted parents to build a mall, but his true intention is to find the diamond necklace that he saw his mother hide, in the forest, the night she was arrested. He sees Robyn’s adopted mother Frances as a possible way to buy the family’s forest.

(End) Robyn and the spirits of the forest have their own way of fighting back- but his cruelty grows as he is willing to do anything, even set the forest on fire to get what he wants. Will he? and what will he do next to revenge Robyn if she wins.

3. Winthrop Cunningham

Who is the character? Supporting character.

Role in the show? His role is that of a quiet presence for Robyn, guiding her in the dreamer aspect and providing artistic inspiration. He is a gentle soul, a brilliant artist, and a lover of nature, filled with poetry and knowledge. Despite his outward calm, he harbors secret dreams and finds hope in Robyn’s presence.

Noteworthy traits Gentle soul, brilliant artist, full of poetry ,knowledge, secret dreamer, finds hope in Robyn’s presence.

Intriguing history: In an unhappy marriage, forced to marry Frances , who reminds him of his snobby mother who also played society rules and tried to break his free spirit.

Intrigue? Mystery?. Despite playing the role of a high-society husband, Winthrop is secretly gay in the conservative atmosphere of the 1950s-60s. His marriage to Frances, a high-society snob, creates a complex dynamic as he struggles with his own identity and societal expectations.

How do they support or drive the conflict with others? He gave up his dream and wants Robyn not to give up. He has a secret hatred for Walter Burdock who plays the role Frances wants in a husband.

Irony — Opposites or paradoxes that exist with the character- He plays the role of a high society rich husband but hates it and often withdraws into his studio, drinks and sketches.

Opposing agendas/etc. that naturally causes conflict with other characters Frances pushes for societal conformity, wanting Winthrop to mold Robyn into a debutante. However, Winthrop resists, aspiring for Robyn to live freely as a bohemian artist, similar to the dreams he abandoned.

Unpredictable? He often fights with Frances silently by expressing it in his art-has a hidden sketch book of his rage.He is an alcoholic. Weeps when alone.

Intriguing relationship with one or more characters The love for his adopted daughter Robyn is his hope to full fill his dream of freedom from society’s demand and his despair in his lack of courage.

(Start) Winthrop right from the beginning sees the magical beauty in little Robyn on the day she is adopted into their family. He is the gentle soul she desperately needs to rebuild trust in humanity once again after a brutal war experience.

(Middle) Winthrop helps build Robyn’s dream to be free and be an artist and lover of nature. He helps her in small secret ways to stand up against society’s demands. But at the same time he harbors secrets of being an alcoholic, gay and wanting to escape his life.

(End) He can’t take the pressure of his unhappy life and must choose between staying in it to help Robyn fight her battle to save their forest and Om Ma or leave? He choses after a painful struggle to abandon Robyn thus breaking her fragile trust in humanity. It is Om Ma that will have to step in as Robyn’s heart breaks once again.

4. THE OLD ONE, OM MA

Who is the character? The Old One- Om Ma Supporting character

Role in the show? Guardian, Aiding Robyn in her mission, has deep love for all life, especially Robyn.

Noteworthy traits wise, old determined, feisty and creates storms and natural disasters when enraged.Loves to tell stories about the beginnings of earth’s creation.

Intriguing history:Is one of the Council of Universal Beings who chose Robyn to return to seek the heart and soul of Humanity. She knows the story behind the diamond amulet and knows where it is hidden.Robyn will need it to carry out her mission.

Intrigue? Mystery? She begins to mold Robyn in her own image . In the eternal portal she is a reflection of Robyn’s power. Tells her the sacred myth of her beginnings. Dreams to return to the ocean where she feels she can rest and heal.

How do they support or drive the conflict with others? She is vulnerable to the evils of humanity and is slowly dying and needs Robyn to rise in her star given power.

Irony — Opposites or paradoxes that exist with the character– Vulnerable and yet all powerful. Even though she is secretly -Mother Earth She is the human reflection -full of emotion, vulnerabilities and a dreamer.

Opposing agendas/etc. That naturally causes conflict with other characters. She knows that Walter Burdock is the beginning of the future climate landslide of disasters for nature – her sacred home- must have Robyn ask the question over and – “Does Humanity deserve to survive?”

Unpredictable? Will she die ? At times she guides Robyn through a time portal into the future to imprint the knowledge of a spiritual warrior.

Intriguing relationship with one or more characters- Her relationship with Robyn and the creatures of the forest and the other Council of Universal Beings.

(Start) tenderly plays with Robyn and builds a magical inquisitive relationship.

(Middle) Begins to teach her about her powers and leads through time portals. Tells her about her mission and how she and the spirits of the forest will help fight Walter Burdock.

(End) Shares more of her emotional side and her dreams and her wish to return to the ocean- her beginnings on the planet because she is deeply afraid she is dying and knows she will hand over the secret amulet and power to Robyn and the others who will arrive on earth to show her the way to the heart and soul of humanity.

5. WING

Who is the character? Wing (The Sparrow King)

Role in the show? supporting Robyn’s soulmate .

Noteworthy traits-Brings out Robyn’s playful side and pastille memories of true love.

Intriguing history: This is the first life time they haven’t been reincarnated together. He is only a ghost- a memory which is his grief.

Intrigue? Mystery? How will he return to earth in a human form to helphis true love.He is only a memory in Robyn’s heart now (but she doesn’t know that he is a ghost).

Opposing agendas/etc. That naturally causes conflict with other characters He secretly struggles with Council of Universal Beings wanting to rescue Robyn and return her to heaven with him. At times it adds to her despair.

(Start) Wing appears in the forest and from the very beginning he helps young Robyn be a playful child and let go of her deep lost feelings.

(Middle)When Robyn grow into her late teens a romantic interplay occurs with Wing and she falls in love with him but he begins to disappear and withdraw as he knows he is only a ghostly memory.

(End) Wing begins to grow jealous as he sees boys flirting at times with Robyn. He can’t take the pain and wants Robyn home in heaven- the Council of universal Beings -call him back to heaven- Robyn’s heart withdraws from humanity and she rest in the arms of Om Ma who reminds her she has a mission in this life time.

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Eclipse Neilson Intriguing Concept and World

“What I learned doing this assignment is to start with simple ideas and explore possibilities using AI then add your personal touch again and explore the core of your concept..

1. Present your Concept.

• A. Engaging and highly proactive hero…Robyn Stir -a war orphan -autistic genious sent by the Council of the Universal Beings to help find the heart of humanity.
• B. up against a major conflict Robyn befriends theThe Old One – OM Ma the guardian in her adopted family’s forest and realizes that saving the planet is the key to humanity’s salvation but quickly realizes that Water Burdock, a money-hungry and ruthless businessman is ready to buy and destroy her beloved forest and perhaps the world.
• C. …goes on unique transformational journey…Om Ma with the help of the Council of Universal beings and her kind adopted father teach Robyn the many ways her secret powers will reach others and ultimately find the heart of humanity.
• D. …Into an intriguing world. Mystical forest beings, universal concepts ,dream worlds of good and evil and the unique mind of a traumatized war orphan, who happens to be a genious.

2. Tell us the World of this show.

• Unique Sub-World: magical teachings of the forest, universe and time portals.
• Previously unexplored: The concepts of the connection between the forest, the universe, time portals and the soul of humanity.
• The unknown:Will Robyn find a way to rescue her beloved Om Ma and her forest and the heart of humanity.
• The unseen: The other realm’s part in the battle symbolized by the patterns of nature-Hidden dangers lurk in the form of greed and the dark secrets within Walter Burdock’s traumatized mind, adding an unseen layer of complexity to the storyline.
• Unheard of Dangers:Greed and dark secrets of Walter Burdock’s crazy traumatized mind and the evil ghosts of humanity.
• Reason to explore it:Will Burdock(evil) win and destroy the forest (the vulnerable)or will Robyn accomplish her first mission as a warrior to save the heart and soul of humanity.

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IEclipse Neilson I have completed for now the framework and have already exchanged.

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• Eclipse Neilson Empathy/Distress

“What I learned doing this assignment is the plot is slowly evolving as a go deeper with the characters. I find my concept most likely will change a bit. I also found by asking AI to go deeper I got more interesting answers

ASIGNMENT 1

QUEEN’S GAMBIT

• A. Undeserved misfortune– orphan haunted by her early childhood and loss of her mother
• B. External Character conflicts Brilliant but non emotional, need to be loved
• C. Plot intruding on life. She replaces love with winning
• D. Moral dilemmas. Take drugs and win or believe she can do it on her own.
• E. Forced decisions they’d never make. Believe she can win and be loved
• Empathy:
• A. Put the character in distress. Feels loss and alone
• B. Make them relatable. Needs to be loved and understood,
• C. Universal experiences that are emotional. Learn to trust

ASIGNMENT2

Concept: Sent by the council of universal Beings, a war orphan adopted into a high society family navigates intertwined worlds using healer-secrets taught to her by the spirits of the ancient forest to helps save herself and humanity only to discover, she must first save her precious forest from the evils of big business builder ready to Destroy the only place she feels safe. ASSIGNMENT 2.

“What I learned doing this assignment is the plot is slowly evolving as a go deeper with the characters. I find my concept most likely will change a bit. I also found by asking AI to go deeper I got more interesting answers.

• 1.ROBYN STIR
• A. Undeserved misfortune: War orphan haunted by the loss of her mother and seeing her die as they ran away from the bombs.
• B. External Character conflicts.Does not fit into the high class society she is adopted into.Trust no-one.
• C. Plot intruding on life. She comes to believe she is destined to help Mother Earth and the spirits of the other realms as they pull her in many directions.
• D. Moral dilemmas:She doesn’t want to hurt her beloved adopted father by making him fail infant of his over bearing wife.
• E. Forced decisions they’d never make. To have to leave her adopted father and only home to follow her destiny

Empathy:

• A. Put the character in distress. Grief and love for her adopted father another misfit and her dead mother.
• B. Make them relatable. She has with him a kind hearted and precious bond found in nature and the beauty of art.
• C. Universal experiences that are emotional. The wounds of loss and war and rejection.

• 2.WINTHROP CUNNINGHAM
• A. Undeserved misfortune. Wanted to be an artist and live a simple bohemian life but was given the responsibilities of the unspoken upper class rules and expectations.
• .
• B. External Character easily intimidated
• C. Plot intruding on life. He sees his suffering through Robyn’s pain.
• D. Moral dilemmas. He doesn’t have the courage to fight and stand up for her when she gets in trouble.
• E. Forced decisions they’d never make. Frances his wife wants to return her to the adoption agency ,instead he writes the letter he never wanted to write to Robyn.
• Empathy:
• A. Put the character in distress. He deeply wants to help l Robyn save her beloved forest from the builders but he will loose the big business deal his wife has pushed him into.
• B. Make them relatable .A loner, Kind hearted, shy, bird lover and classical music.
• C. Universal experiences that are emotional. The wounds of the world and his part in it weigh heavy on his soul.

• 3.WINTHROP CUNNINGHAM (ROBYN’S ADOPTED FATHER)
• A. Undeserved misfortune. Wanted to be an artist and live a simple life but was given the responsibilities of the unspoken upper class law.
• .
• B. External Character easily intimidated
• C. Plot intruding on life. He sees his suffering through Robyn’s pain.
• D. Moral dilemmas.He doesn’t have the courage to fight
• E. Forced decisions they’d never make. -return her to the adoption agency and write the letter he never wanted to writ
• 4.THE OLD ONE (MOTHER EARTH)
• A. Undeserved misfortune.Humanity doesn’t believe in her as a caring living soul.
• B. External Character beauty of nature, powerful , vulnerable
• C. Plot intruding on life. She is dying and needs help to survive.
• D. Moral dilemmas.destroy humanity
• E. Forced decisions they’d never make.destroy humanity.
• Empathy:
• A. Put the character in distress.loving nature knowing sometimes her choices will harm others she loves.
• B. Make them relatable. Kind hearted, wise guardian for Robyn
• C. Universal experiences learning what the cosmic and nature have to teach humanity.

5.WING (THE SPARROW KING)

• A. Undeserved misfortune. He did not get to return in this life time with his true love Robyn
• B. External Character free loving and vulnerable
• C. Plot intruding on life. He can only be present in Robyns fragmented memory of other life times.
• D. Moral dilemmas is to try to take Robyn back to heaven
• E. Forced decisions -hurt his beloved Robyn by abandoning her.
• Empathy:
• A. Put the character in distress.He can’t protect Robyn when she grieves and is in fear..
• B. Make them relatable. Must obey the laws of the universe and so he can’t tell her his secret connection to her.
• C. Universal experiences -finding hope in where there is a sense of powerlessness and the unknown future.

6.FRANCES ( ROBYN’S ADOPTED MOTHER)

• A. Undeserved misfortune.trapped in high society expectations
• B. External Character -Socialite
• C. Plot intruding on life.She sees a part of her rejected child in Robyn’s love fairy lore.
• D. Moral dilemmas to not repeat the tragedy that society did to her.
• E. Forced decisions to teach her the hard core world
• Empathy:
• A. Put the character in distress. She knows she will hurt Robyn and her husband by rejecting them both and telling her husbands secret.
• B. Make them relatable wants to be loved but doesn’t know how to be lovable
• C. Universal experiences. Loneliness

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Eclipse Neilson Relationship Map

What I’ve learn today the more you can develop depth and loops the more the story moves forward and holds together.

Asignment1

QUEENS GAMBIT

MAIN CHARACTER -Beth (protagonist)

SURFACE chess champion

COMMON GROUND

CONFLICT copes with addiction

HISTORY a tragic childhood

SUBTEXT must believe in herself and let someone love her.

RELATIONSHIP ARC must learn to let someone in other heart

MAIN CHARACTER -Benny

SURFACE chess genius

COMMON GROUND he and Beth are obsessed with chess

CONFLICTBenny is falling in love

HISTORY he has won but now is a loser

SUBTEXT he wants to save Beth a

RELATIONSHIP ARC they must learn to navigate a complicate relationship.

ASIGNMENT 2

Concept: Sent by the universe, a teen war orphan navigates intertwined worlds using healer-secrets taught to her by the spirits of the ancient forest to helps save humanity, only to discover she must first save her village’s forest from the evils of a big business builder.

MAIN CHARACTER -ROBYN STIR (protagonist)

SURFACE A lost withdrawn war orphan who feels humanity is dangerous.

COMMON GROUND bonds with Winthrop and the creatures of the forest

CONFLICT her forest is threatened to be destroyed by Walter Burdock

HISTORY sent from the universe to help open the hearts of humanity

SUBTEXT she is gifted with magical psychic powers that often scare her

RELATIONSHIP ARC she learns that she is a true spirit guardian sent to help save humanity.

MAIN CHARACTER –WINTHROP CUNNINGHAM

SURFACE adopted father

COMMON GROUND both introverted and creative

CONFLICT fearful of his high society wife who sees Robin as a quagmire.

HISTORY born into money but does not value it.

SUBTEXT he feels like a failure.but is a dreamer like Robyn

RELATIONSHIP ARC he learns he can help fight for Robyns dream.

MAIN CHARACTER –WALTER BURDOCK (antagonist)

SURFACE-money hungry mall builder

COMMON GROUND both have interest in the town’s forest

CONFLICT opposite reasons he wants to destroy the forest to build a mall

HISTORY inherited his money

SUBTEXT Money is his identity and god

RELATIONSHIP ARC he must break down to see why Robyn haunts him .

.MAIN CHARACTER-WING THE SPARROW KING

SURFACE a playful magical character who befriends Robyn

COMMON GROUND Best friends

CONFLICT he has fallen in love with Robyn but he is a ghost

HISTORY they have travelled many life times together

SUBTEXT he loves her and tries to lure her back home to the heavens.

RELATIONSHIP ARC he must learn to let go

MAIN CHARACTER –THE OLD ONE

SURFACE Guardian (mother Earth)

COMMON GROUND Both are sent by the universe with a task

CONFLICT she won’t let Robyn wander off her path and Robyn must make sure the Old One (mother Earth ) doesn’t give up.

HISTORY they both are on a mission from the Council of Universal Beings.

SUBTEXT Robyn is her grandchild -a warrior of mother earth

RELATIONSHIP ARC they are each others strength

5.MAIN CHARACTER –FRANCIS CUNNINGHAM

SURFACE –adopted mother

COMMON GROUND love of the old fairytales

CONFLICT she wants Robyn to be a part of high society and the daughter she always wanted.

HISTORY- comes from a English family background who lost all their money

SUBTEXT- Francis never got to be her wild self

RELATIONSHIP ARC they come to understand each other

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Eclipse Neilson Assignment 1

Queens Gambit

Beth

A.Situational; Hope/fear

Wants to win and beat the Russian champion.It has been her goal.

Fear she wont and everything she has invested in didn’t work.

B.Motivations

She has overwhelming inner pain, fear that she numbs by using her brain to overcome her feelings.

C.Mask

Total calm hides her awkwardness- fear she doesn’t know the answer that society expects.

E.Weaknesses

She drinks to escape – believes the pills make her smarter and can’t cope with her vulnerability.

F.Coping Mechanism

Being alone , drinking, not sharing feelings.

Eclipse Neilson Assignment 2 character’s emotions

What I learned doing this assignment is that some of my characters reflect each other- same wound different results.

My show

Concept: Sent by the universe a teen war orphan navigates intertwined worlds using healer-secrets taught to her by the spirits of the ancient forest to helps save humanity as she heals her broken heart discovers she must first save her village’s forest from the evils of a corporate mogul.

Robyn (protagonist)

A.Situational; Hope/fear

Robyn hopes to help save the forest that has become her secret family / fear it will be destroyed like all the wars she has lived through life time after life time of loss..

B.Motivations

To carry out her mother’s mission guided by the Universal Council of Beings.Wanting more than anything to return to her arms.

C.Mask: base Negative emotion /Public needs

Join the high society she is being raised in by her adopted family/ be the tough rebel to hide her broken heart/ not let anyone know she has a sacred mission

E.Weaknesses

Doesn’t know when some one cares. and she can’t trust the feeling someone is loving her. Often a loner and must learn to let love in.

F.Coping Mechanism

Hiding in the forest alone in her magical world.

Winthrop Cunningham

A.Situational; Hope/fear

That he will have to live up to his grandfather’s expectations.

B.Motivations

To live the live like the French impressionist- a vagabond of sorts

C.Mask: base Negative emotion /Public needs

Doesn’t say what he is truly feeling and sometimes lies to save himself from conflict.

E.Weaknesses

Wont fight for what he believes in.

F.Coping Mechanism

Smokes a pipe.

A.Situational; Hope/fear

B.Motivations

C.Mask: base Negative emotion /Public needs

E.Weaknesses

F.Coping Mechanism

Wing (The Sparrow king)-

A.Situational; Hope/fear

He hopes Robyn will fall in love with him and run back to the heavens. Fear she will stay on earth to complete her mission.

B.Motivations

For everyone he is a secret gentle king.

C.Mask: base Negative emotion /Public needs

E.Weaknesses

He is a ghost

F.Coping Mechanism

He flys away and vanishes.

Walter Burdock (Antagonist:) 65

Situational: Hope / Fear

A.Hopes to buy out the town and be a multi billionaire.

Fear some one might see he is afraid of spiders.

B. Motivation: Want / Need

To rule/to control everything.

C. Mask: Base Negative Emotion / Public Mask

Pretends he cares

D.Weaknesses

He has never loved anyone- takes pride of that fact.

E.Triggers

losing he gets enraged.

F.Coping Mechanism

gambling and candy

The Old One( Mother Earth)

A.Situational; Hope/fear

Hopes humanity will not destroy her.Fear they will.

B.Motivations

To teach Robyn the magic of the old ways serve as her guardian.

C.Mask: base Negative emotion /Public needs

She can become destructive.

E.Weaknesses

She cares too much.

F.Coping Mechanism

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Eclipse Neilson -Intriguing Character Layers

ASSIGNMENT 1:

Make a list of the places you’ve already seen Character Intrigue in the previous episodes QUEEN’S GAMBIT

What stands for front in this episode that showed up in the beginning is

1.Beth’s i continual loss of role models – mother figures,(both Mothers) teacher (the Janitor) and friends (Joleene)

2.Also Beth’s anger that she channels through her loosing. She uses her anger to survive and fight back with becoming a better chess player.

3.The Janitor taught her to learn to lose gracefully and his teaching shows up in episode 4

4.Her fear of defeat both in chess and in life.

5.Her adopted mother like her mother have a drinking and relationship problem and makes it hard for Beth to know how to do relationships.

6.All her close role models including Joleen have drug or addiction problems.

7.Beth has empathy but does not know how to express it except in a few incidences. Back when she told her Joleen that she was sorry she wasn’t adopted.

8.Sexuality and Love relationships is something she so far and is reflected from her years at the orphanage a puzzle . Instead of feeling she approaches it like chess.

ASSIGNMENT 2

1. For your Inner Circle characters, fill in any of the Intrigue items that apply.

Subject line: Eclipse Neilson -Intriguing Character Layers

MAIN CHARACTERS

Robyn Stir (protagonist,)

Winthrop Cunningham (adopted father)

Wing (The Sparrow king )The ghost of the forest who is in love with Robyn,

The Old One (Mother Earth), Robyn’s guide

Walter Burdock (Antagonist:) 65 an insensitive money hungry billionaire -mall builder

Character Name: <div>

1.Robyn Stir
Role: protagonist

Hidden agendas: To get the villagers to love the forest by visiting it.

To stop Walter Burdock Burdock

Competition:in class she always has the right answer

Conspiracies:

Secrets:She steals her adopted mother’s jewels for a treasure hunt in the forest.

Deception:

Wound:
A war orphan who often does not feel safe except in the forest.

Secret Identity:
A goddess guardian in a new form.

2Winthrop Cunningham (adopted father)

Secrets: At times has thought of giving up or running away from the high society he was raised in. </div><div>

Deception: pleases his wife but finds her deplorable.

Wound: misunderstood man who just wanted to live a simple life.

Secret Identity: Robyn’s human guardian.

3.Wing (The Sparrow king )The ghost of the forest Character Name:

Hidden agendas: he is in love with Robyn and he is a ghost with no power.</div><div>

Competition: competes with a boy in high school that has an eye on Robyn

Conspiracies:
Secrets: he is a ghost and a memory in Robyn’s psyche

Deception: he keeps his identity a secret hoping something will change

Wound: He wanted to return to earth with Robin and feels betrayed by the council of Universal beings

Secret Identity: Robyn’s future love

4. The Old One (Mother Earth), Robyn’s guide

Hidden agendas: to save earth </div><div>

Competition: with humanity

Conspiracies: out smart the evils of humanity

Secrets: Robyn is her daughter.

Deception:

Wound: Humans have lost their love for Her.

Secret Identity: Mother earth

5.<b style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Walter Burdock (Antagonist:) 65 an insensitive money hungry billionaire -mall builder

Hidden agendas:To own the town </div>

Competition: anyone in his way.for now Robyn

Conspiracies:

Secrets: His mother died in jail for killing his father.

Deception: pretends he is the savior and a good Christian but is a true atheist.

Wound: he trust no one.

Secret Identity:

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Eclipse Neilson Engaging Main Characters ASSIGNMENT 1

QUEENS GAMBIT

A. Role in the show: Lead character Beth a genious possibly autistic young women who has had tragic childhood but over comes all to become the world best chess player.
B. Unique Purpose / Expertise:
She wants to dominate in amens world the game of chess and become the best.
C. Intrigue: What is secret beneath the surface?
She does not give up.
She feels less than and is deeply afraid of loosing and has no coping skills to lose.
D. Moral Issue: What moral boundaries are they crossing?
She steals , does drugs and drinks to get what ever she needs to succeed
E. Unpredictable: What will they do next?
She begins to show a kind .sensitive side shown once before when she felt bad for a fellow orphan not getting adopted and now with her adopted mother.
F. Empathetic: Why do we care?
She cares but is clues on how to deal with her loss except for heart breaking memories of her mother.

Eclipse Neilson Engaging Main Characters ASSIGNMENT 2

What I have learned is to pause take your time and simplify.I am doing this from scratch so I am often surprised by the answer I think of when from the traits. I also realize the AI speeds up my thinking but at times it causes me more confusion- so then I breath and go bak to the original and remember Hal saying “it does not need to be perfect we are only at the beginning”.

Tell us the journey of your show.

Concept. A misfit teen is sent by the universe to help save humanity by first saving her village forest.

2. Who are the main characters that will sell your show?

Robyn Stir (protagonist,)

Winthrop Cunningham (adopted father)

Wing (The Sparrow king )The ghost of the forest who is in love with Robyn,

The Old One (Mother Earth), Robyn’s guide

Walter Burdock (Antagonist:) 65 an insensitive money hungry billionaire -mall builder

3. Answer these questions for each of those characters.

Role in the show:
Lead Character protagonist.
Robyn Stir A world war II orphan is chosen by the universe to return to earth to help save the soul of humanity. She in this life time is a dimension-hopping lonely misfit – teenager with psychic healing skills that has found solace in her village forest.

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise:Robyn is trained by mystical forest guides to discern a person’s innermost heart secrets. They also teach her to locate the forest’s hidden mystical portals. Through this knowledge, she gains the power to help humanity recognize their role on Earth, with the ultimate goal of preserving her cherished forest and others worldwide from devastation.

C. Intrigue: What is secret beneath the surface?

Robyn must relive her own wounds of lifetime after lifetime to connect to the truth of others so as to heal humanity and save her forest.

D. Moral Issue: What moral boundaries are they crossing?

Robyn struggles with her rage and hatred for those who killed her parents in this lifetime and yet she must help others feel love.

E. Unpredictable: What will they do next?

Robyns Violence in all forms is a trigger for unpredictable untamed rage of a child who lost everything.Will she turn to herself or others or find away to fight evil?

F. Empathetic: Why do we care?

She represents the mystical beings who have no voice and the children of the world who see their future being destroyed.

2

A. Winthrop Cunningham

Robyns adopted father -a withdrawn artist writer who makes a

living owning the town’s journal so as to keep his vibrant

social seeking wife. He finds solace in Robyn’s quiet heartfelt

presence and begins to bond with her and help her on her quest

to save the forest.

B.His unique purpose

Winthrop helps support Robyn and help her trust humanity.

C. Intrigue: What is secret beneath the surface?

Robyn is everything he dreamed of being but was too afraid of because of society rules.

D. Moral Issue:

He is a secret drinker

E. Unpredictable: What will they do next?

He will shame his wife by being drunk in an important corporate event.

F. Empathetic: Why do we care?

He is a lost soul created by society.

Wing (The Sparrow king-

A.Role in the show:

He is Robyns buddy and companion traveler in the forest

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise:

the forest is his home and he has traveled lifetimes with Robyn

C. Intrigue: What is secret beneath the surface?

He is in love with Robyn but he has no power because he is simply a powerless ghost

D. Moral Issue: What moral boundaries are they crossing?

He struggles with his being in love and letting her know the secrets of her past lives verses her discovering them one at at time.

E. Unpredictable: What will they do next?

He disappears when overwhelmed with feeling making Robyn feel abandoned again.

F. Empathetic: Why do we care?

His gentle love is so pure.

Role in the show: The Old One( Mother Earth)

Robyn’s guardian guide

Unique Purpose / Expertise:

To help guide Robyn’s destiny in this life to save the soul of humanity by saving the forest first.

Intrigue: What is secret beneath the surface?

She is the Goddess Mother Earth

Moral Issue: What moral boundaries are they crossing?

Her only quest is survival and she must control her destructive power.

Unpredictable: What will they do next?

Show her power through storms, earthquakes…

Empathetic: Why do we care?

All her loving beings of the forest are her children.

Walter Burdock (Antagonist:) 65 an insensitive money hungry billionaire corporate mall builder.

B. Unique Purpose / Expertise:

To get what he wants at any cost, no matter who or what he destroys. His motto is “it’s all about the money”

C. Moral Issue: What moral boundaries are they crossing?

Morals have no purpose in his world.

Unpredictable: What will they do next?
He might set the forest on fire just to get things to move faster.

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Eclipse Neilson Three Circles of Characters assignment 2

Main Characters Robyn once a world war II orphan with a broken heart is chosen by the universe to return to earth to help save the soul of humanity as a a dimension-hopping lonely misfit – a teenage refuge with psychic healing skills. She quickly discovers her task is deeply intwined in saving her village forest against money hungry mall builders

Wing (Sparrow king ) Robyn’s early childhood companion from a past life , now a ghost who managed to escape the war by being sent to a parallel dimension. He returns as a ghost. He and remains her loyal protector, helping her navigate both emotional and physical challenges. Old One: The wise leader of the village forest, knowledgeable about ancient rituals and lore. She sees the potential in Robyn and becomes her mentor.

Walter Burdock (Antagonist:) 65 an insensitive money hungry billionaire -mall builder

Winthrop Cunningham-Robyn’s quiet shy adopted father head of the small towns news paper

B. Connected Circle:

Elara: Robyn’s mother, appearing in flashbacks. Her teachings and memories play a pivotal role in Lila’s healing journey. .

Snow- a goddess draped in a snowy mantle, governing the northern snows who teaches Robyn the power of silence to find her answers.

Nara: A mysterious, ethereal being who visits Robin in dreams. Offers cryptic guidance and represents the voice of the universe.

Babs Cunningham -adopted mother a social seeker.

C. Environment Circle:

Dwellers of the Whispering Woods The dense, magical part of the village forest, where trees communicate and ancient spirits reside.

Protectors of the Hearthstone Altar: A sacred place deep within the forest where healing rituals are performed. It’s said that this is where the soul of the forest and humanity can be mended.

The lost souls of <b style=”background-color: transparent; font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>The Ashen Fields: The barren lands marking the aftermath of war. A grim reminder of what’s at stake.

Celestial Glade Dwellers: A serene clearing in the forest where Robin often gazes at the stars, seeking answers and connecting with the universe.

Throughout the series, as Robin tries to mend her heart and that of humanity, she’ll be constantly challenged by the intertwined fates of the characters from each circle. The environment, both nurturing and threatening, will act as a reflection of Lila’s internal journey, amplifying the stakes and deepening the narrative’s resonance.

The town people ( to be developed

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Eclipse Neilson -( Lesson 2 ) 3 circles Queen’s Gambit

“What I learned doing this assignment is that the show in both 1 and 2 have new main characters each time- but the loop is clear -Beth’s relationship with them as a mother figures.

Main characters’ flaws

Beth is slightly autistic and hides her inner wounds with drugs and her obsession to gain control of her life by winning chess.

Her mother – an alcoholic and committed suicided-

The Director- is formal and lacks visible empathy in many ways.

Adopted Mother is depressed and drinker /pill popper.

She also has helpers.

Jolene her friend- a survivor in a racist world / introduces Beth to pills

The Janitor- has little power in the world but a true supporter.

Episode 1

Main circle

Beth Harmon

Mrs. Deardorff Director of the orphanage –

Jolene friend

Janitor/chess teacher Mr. Shiabol

2.Connecting Circle

Harrison (worker)

Teacher

3. Environment Circle

Children and workers at orphanage

Episode 2

Main Circle

Anne Wheatley adopted mother

Connecting Circle

Mr. Wheatley adopted Father

Bradly Store owner

Librarian

Mr. Shiabel

Man1 chess player/ semi friend

Harry Beltick

3. Environment Circle

Chess game register 1 &2

Man1 chess player/ semi friend

Annette Packer girl chess player.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson

QUEEN’S GAMBIT

What I learned for this opening show is that it is not only about chess, but the spirit of a fierce young child surviving against all odds a tragic childhood. It is about a child’s strong spirit learning many forms of survival techniques. The audience feels the empathy, but Beth the main character has a sad silence about her – feelings are silently expressed by the actress’s glances.So far , I deeply, love this show.

Big Picture Hooks-

From a tragic childhood to a brilliant young women ,raised in an orphanage in the 1950’s to a chess genius , in the times when it was still a man’s game .But sadly she struggles with a drug addiction and slight autism.

BETH is introduced as having odd, somewhat reckless behavior, but quickly shows she can also be in complete control as a skilled chess player. (Intriguing character)

Flashback where she looses her mother in a car accident. (Empathy)

Sent to an orphanage. (Empathy)

Beth looses her birth identity as the director of the orphanage says she will burn the dress with her embroidered name in a heart.(empathy and I truly felt this moment)

Beth learns a bit of her childhood odd/semi autistic behavior exacerbated in the orphanage when under stress.(empathy and Loop)

Introduced to a new friend JOLENE who tells her about the magical vitamins.(drugs)

Jolene asks her a big question -“what was the last thing your mother ever said to you before she died?” Beth remembers but does not share. (Empathy)

It was “I wish I was dead” we see that the car crash was most likely suicide. Jolene responds, “if do remember let me know.” (Loop and empathy)

Beth takes vitamins (drugs) and we see that her mother was a drug addict.(Loop) Did she inherit this? or is subconsciously trying to die too?

Beth had lived in a precarious situation that her father tried to rescue her from. (Empathy)

Beth discovers the janitor playing chess (intrigue Loop)

Learns to stand up to him and recognizes her strength to get what she wants. (Intrigue)

Shows how she can play chess in her mind on the ceiling (possible slight autism again.)(intrigue)

Janitor teachers her chess (intrigue and loop) Their friendship builds empathy or replaces her absent father.

Beth begins to believe her winning chess with the janitor is because of the drug she is given each day. (Loop)

She learns there are chess ‘openings” that set up strategies the first one she learns is the Queens Gambit- this opens a whole new world. (Loop)

Introduces her to the head of the chess club, whom she beats in a game of chess.

He invites her to the high school chess club dominated by boys and men. (Intrigue and loop)

Before the big day to the high school she is taken off the magical vitamins that she believes is why she is so good. She panics. (Loop)

Jolene sneaks her a vitamin before she goes. (Loop)

She beats all of them and we see the story unfolding another theme- women and chess. (Intrigue and loop)

And recognizes hope for her future- but she still believes it is the pills . (Intrigue and loop)

Decides to steal the pills the night everyone is watching a movie. (Intrigue)

Like a desperate child she gulps handfuls of pills.

The director see what she has done just as Beth collapses on the floor. Shattering the bottle of pills on the floor. We don’t know if she will survive. ( Invites Obsession = what will happen to her and her future?)

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Eclipse Neilson

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I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.

3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.

4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.

5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.

6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.

This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

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I Eclipse Neilson agree to the GROUP RELEASE FORM

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As a member of this group, I agree to the following:

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2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.

I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.

3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.

4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.

5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.

6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.

This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Hi Everyone

1.My name is Eclipse Neilson

2.I have completed 6 full features-one is optioned and another is with two producers who are seeking funding for it.

3.I hope to learn how to write for TV and learn how to use AI with comfort and ease.

4.In the 1990’s I rescued an old zoo elephant from decades of chains and neglect from a corrupt town. It was a deep and eye opening experience and the subject of my first screenplay. Because of this experience I am committed to write scripts that address discrimination in all its different forms along with themes that help the environmental movement.

5. I was in the ProSeries 73 and WIM and MSC15 and….

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Eclipse Neilson is a Note Taking Professional!

1. Tell us the logline of your treatment from the last assignment.

Sent by the Council of the Universal Beings a Nun and a Witch join forces to save humanity from the all-consuming hatred that has permeated their village and the heart of humanity.

2. Tell us how you would honor each of the following requests:

Cut the budget in half.
Yes, I could do that by adjusting the special effects and some of the locations.
Write it for a different audience (quadrant).
Double the conflict.
Yes I could build on the hatred and fear aspect.
Change the sex and age of the lead character.
Maybe but then it would not address one of the political issues facing LBGQ
Change the genre.
Maybe to drama /horror

3. Answer the question “What I learned is…?” and post it at the top of your work.

What I’ve learned that we must be flexible and know a script can be written in many ways.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson feedback on pitches

I welcome feedback . Thank you.

Elevator Pitch

Pitch 1.

A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity.

Pitch 2

The Council of Universal Beings sends two soulmates back to earth to save the soul of humanity – one is a Nun and the other is a witch.

Pitch 3

I am an optioned screenwriter and award-winning author. I specialize in drama with strong female leads, inspirational themes, women’s issues, and discrimination in all areas.

Pitch Fest Pitch

Hi, I’m Eclipse Neilson and I’m an optioned screenwriter. I am currently a quarter finalist in the Emerging Screenwriters International contest and an award-wining author.

I write drama sci-fi scripts that address all areas of discrimination and current environmental issues.

My newest project is The Nun and The Witch. Dram/sci-fi

The Council of Universal Beings sends two soulmates back to earth to save the soul of humanity – one is a Nun who will become a saint and the other is a Witch who will help her.

Their bond sets off the conservative villagers who are out to get rid of them no matter what, while the ghost of the church’s late minister is trapped between heaven and hell and needs their help.

The budget is 5-10 million

This is a great role for someone like Lena Poussette (witch ) and Elise Le Hir (Nun) and somebody like Anthony Hopkins (minister)

Act I

The souls of Anne(nun) and Lunea (witch) and her daughter Athena travel through a time tunnel and experience their relevant past lives. They arrive at the present where they are separated and lose their memory of each other. Their task will be to find each other.

Act II

They find each other and have a strong attraction. Sister Anne a timid nun is taking care of Father Sinclair an aging minister of a small conservative church and Lunea is a Witch having escaped with her daughter from Ukraine.

Father Sinclair dies leaving Sister Anne in charge.

Act III

Sister Anne being in charge of the church and bonding with a witch sets off the angry villagers, who set out to get them. Sister Anne must find the courage to become the leader she is destined to become so as to become a saint. Lunea must help her. Meanwhile, Father Sinclair begins to haunt Sister Anne because he is trapped between heaven and hell and the evil spirits are trying to take him and the village over.

Act IV

Sister Anne, Lunea and her daughter are shot by an angry teen who feels he has been rejected by Lunea’s daughter. Just before Lunea and Sister Anne die in each other’s arms, Lunea accomplishes her mission and is able to secretly perform a miracle that looks like Sister Anne has healed Athena. The Council of Universal Beings appear and returns their souls back to heaven. This causes a wake-up call for the villagers similar to Romeo and Juliet’s last scene.

Credibility: I am currently working with a producer in preproduction for one of my scripts and learning what it takes to make a film which is very helpful as a writer.

Phone Pitch

Hi, I’m Eclipse Neilson I am an optioned screenwriter and an award-wining author who specializes in dramas with strong female roles, and discrimination and environmental issues in all areas.

I have a Drama/sci-fi titled The Nun and The Witch

I have forty years of experience teaching both Goddess and Christian traditions in spiritual retreats and conferences.

What’s the budget range? 5-15 million
Who do you see in the main roles? Upcoming aspiring actors and one A lister someone like Anthony Hopkins

How many pages is the script? 110 pages

Who else has seen this? No one yet

Why do you think this fits our company? You are doing work that is helping the world come together and address current issues.

How does the movie end? Tragic ending that creates hope for the future and humanity. A Romeo Juliet ending.

Query Letter

THE NUN AND THE WITCH

DRAMA/SCI-FI

Written by Eclipse Neilson

Humanity is close to self-destruction as hatred permeates the planet.

The Council of Universal Beings sends two soulmates back to Earth to prove Love is greater than Hate. One is a nun destined to become a saint and one is a witch who will help her fulfill her destiny.

They must find the one moment in time that changes the course of the future of humanity.

But the Nun is haunted by the late minister of her church – now a ghost trapped between heaven and hell battling demons seeking her help. And the powerful Witch is harassed by raging villagers who have set out to destroy both of them for their friendship and their mission.

Will hate-filled discrimination be spurred by religious dogma rule once again? Or will the Council of Universal beings step in one more time to create the moment that will change the course of the soul of humanity?

I am an optioned screenwriter and award-winning author. I specialize in drama with strong female leads, inspirational themes, women’s issues, and discrimination in all areas.

If you are interested in the concept, I would be happy to send you the script.

Eclipse Neilson

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson

I have learned to refine my work. And see that both the pro-series and the MSC15 made this class easier and yet a notch harder. I have a large data base and some good connections at the moment, Because this is the highest-budgeted script I have written I will need to do a little more exploration of producers.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Phone Pitch

Hi, I’m Eclipse Neilson I am an optioned screenwriter and an award-wining author who specializes in dramas with strong female roles, and discrimination and environmental issues in all areas.

I have a Drama/sci-fi titled The Nun and The Witch

I have forty years of experience teaching both Goddess and Christian traditions in spiritual retreats and conferences.

What’s the budget range? 5-15 million
Who do you see in the main roles? Upcoming aspiring actors and one A lister someone like Anthony Hopkins

How many pages is the script? 110 pages

Who else has seen this? No one yet

Why do you think this fits our company? You are doing work that is helping the world come together and address current issues.

How does the movie end? Tragic ending that creates hope for the future and humanity. A Romeo Juliet ending.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Pitch Fest Pitch

Hi, I’m Eclipse Neilson and I’m an optioned screenwriter. I am currently a quarter finalist in the Emerging Screenwriters International contest and an award-wining author.

I write drama sci-fi scripts that address all areas of discrimination and current environmental issues.

My newest project is The Nun and The Witch. Dram/sci-fi

The Council of Universal Beings sends two soulmates back to earth to save the soul of humanity – one is a Nun who will become a saint and the other is a Witch who will help her.

Their bond sets off the conservative villagers who are out to get rid of them no matter what, while the ghost of the church’s late minister is trapped between heaven and hell and needs their help.

The budget is 5-10 million

This is a great role for someone like Lena Poussette (witch ) and Elise Le Hir (Nun) and somebody like Anthony Hopkins (minister)

Act I

The souls of Anne(nun) and Lunea (witch) and her daughter Athena travel through a time tunnel and experience their relevant past lives. They arrive at the present where they are separated and lose their memory of each other. Their task will be to find each other.

Act II

They find each other and have a strong attraction. Sister Anne a timid nun is taking care of Father Sinclair an aging minister of a small conservative church and Lunea is a Witch having escaped with her daughter from Ukraine.

Father Sinclair dies leaving Sister Anne in charge.

Act III

Sister Anne being in charge of the church and bonding with a witch sets off the angry villagers, who set out to get them. Sister Anne must find the courage to become the leader she is destined to become so as to become a saint. Lunea must help her. Meanwhile, Father Sinclair begins to haunt Sister Anne because he is trapped between heaven and hell and the evil spirits are trying to take him and the village over.

Act IV

Sister Anne, Lunea and her daughter are shot by an angry teen who feels he has been rejected by Lunea’s daughter. Just before Lunea and Sister Anne die in each other’s arms, Lunea accomplishes her mission and is able to secretly perform a miracle that looks like Sister Anne has healed Athena. The Council of Universal Beings appear and returns their souls back to heaven. This causes a wake-up call for the villagers similar to Romeo and Juliet’s last scene.

Credibility: I am currently working with a producer in preproduction for one of my scripts and learning what it takes to make a film which is very helpful as a writer.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Query letter.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH

DRAMA/SCI-FI

Written by Eclipse Neilson

Humanity is close to self-destruction as hatred permeates the planet.

The Council of Universal Beings sends two soulmates back to Earth to prove Love is greater than Hate. One is a nun destined to become a saint and one is a witch who will help her fulfill her destiny.

They must find the one moment in time that changes the course of the future of humanity.

But the Nun is haunted by the late minister of her church – now a ghost trapped between heaven and hell battling demons seeking her help. And the powerful Witch is harassed by raging villagers who have set out to destroy both of them for their friendship and their mission.

Will hate-filled discrimination be spurred by religious dogma rule once again? Or will the Council of Universal beings step in one more time to create the moment that will change the course of the soul of humanity?

I am an optioned screenwriter and award-winning author. I specialize in drama with strong female leads, inspirational themes, women’s issues, and discrimination in all areas.

If you are interested in the concept, I would be happy to send you the script.

Eclipse Neilson

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson

what I am trying to learn is to look at the difference between a logline and a high concept.(not quite sure I have it yet.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH Drama/ Sci-fi

Concept: The Council of the Universal Beings send a Nun and a Witch to join forces to save humanity from the all-consuming hatred that has permeated their village and the heart of humanity.

Pitch 1.

A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity.

Pitch 2

The Council of Universal Beings sends two soulmates back to earth to save the soul of humanity – one is a Nun and the other is a witch.

Pitch 3

I am an optioned screenwriter and award-winning author. I specialize in drama with strong female leads, inspirational themes, women’s issues, and discrimination in all areas.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Synopsis Hooks

THE NUN AND THE WITCH

DRAMA/SCI-FI

Written by Eclipse Neilson

Humanity is close to self-destruction as hatred permeates the planet forcing the Council of Universal Beings to send two soulmates (twin flames) to save humanity – one is a nun destined to become a saint and one is a witch who will help her fulfill her destiny.

They must prove love is greater than hate by living one moment in time that changes the course of the future of humanity.

But the timid Nun is haunted by her late boss a minister – now a ghost trapped between heaven and hell battling demons seeking her help. And the powerful Witch is harassed by raging villagers who have set out to destroy both of them for their friendship.

Will their love be greater than the hate fed by discrimination and dogma? Will the Council of Universal beings step in one more time?

Humanity has a chance to shine or is it too late?

ECLIPSE NEILSON 10 Most Interesting Things (in the first line of your post)
10 Most Interesting Things
1. A witch and a nun become best friends.
2.The witch and the nun have been lovers in past lives and are twin flames.
3. The witch and the nun have been sent on a mission to help save humanity proving that Love must be greater than Hate.
4. They must experience one moment in time to change the course of history.
5. A minister is now a ghost trapped and haunted by demons and must help the nun and the witch on their mission to save his soul.
6. The minister leaves the nun to run the church.
7. They travel through time reliving historical moments of discrimination.
8.The Council of Universal Beings sends two females (twin flames) to save humanity – one is a nun and one is a witch.
9. The Nun is destined to become a saint this lifetime and the witch is there to make sure this happens.
10. The connections between Christianity and Pagan beliefs are woven together as a powerful healing force.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Synopsis for Producer Interview

(I am still working out the story and outcome.)

1. TITLE: MAKE ME AN ANEL

2. HIGH CONCEPT

A runaway street artist, who confers with the angels, has lost hope for anything but a tortured street life for herself and her dog until an eccentric, once famous hippie folksinger on the verge of suicide rescues them. ( a modern-day Harold and Maude)

3. Target Audience women 25+women

4. Genre Drama

5 Fits Budget 5-10million

6. Strong roles for bankable actors

Lead roles

1.) 17 yr old psychically gifted street artist, toughened by the harsh reality of her life, dreams of being a famous artist.

2.) 75 yr old once famous folksinger/activist afraid she is losing her purpose in life dreams to be on stage, sing one more song and fight one more cause but she is afraid time has passed her by.

Synopsis

A psychically gifted runaway street artist, toughened by the harsh reality of her life, secretly dreams of becoming a famous artist. She has a special gift and is able to see the angel and the demons near people. She and her beloved dog are given a home by an eccentric old hippie folksinger/activist who has lost her purpose in life and is ready to give up. But still dreams of one more song- one more performance and one more purpose.

The two must learn to trust each as they face hard life facts and discover they are each other’s last bit of hope.

With the help of an Irish housekeeper and an angel with a broken wing, they slowly join forces to build a dream together. They set out to build a shelter for runaway teen girls in trouble some of the runaways will have their beloved dogs.

But the singer’s older brother a ruthless businessman, who wants to steal his sister’s home and put her in a retirement home labels her “unfit.” The battle begins.

This forces the teen and the Irish maid and the angel with a broken wing to join forces to fight the brother and the legal authorities who believe an aging hippie and eccentric runaway is a high risk for building a shelter for homeless girls.

Will the singer have her dream come true? Will she find her purpose? Will the runaway finally find a home and feel loved and become the artist she has always dreamed of? The angel with the broken wing has the answer and leads the teen into the magical realms of her painting.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

Hi Joan Butler

I love this ! It is a deep drama combination of depressing situations and suspense building of one moment at a time- where is it all going to go? I found myself asking. It is an important subject and I applaud you for taking it on.

What will the women do? You were very good at leading us to the next page. I kept wanting to know will there be aha moments and yes there were. I love the red flag consciousness. You built the struggles of the therapist to get them to see and then you left us not knowing what the abuser would do. Very good.

If I was to add or suggest anything I might do some nonverbal expression with the women -show it instead of telling it at times when in therapy. You did it with the clenched fist as an example.

Good suspense and action with Mark at the door. Scary.

There is a lot of dilemma with the characters loving the abuser. And then the vulnerable baby. That grabbed my heart.

You ended with cliffhangers a few times and especially at the end. Nice job. Thanks for letting me read it. Eclipse

[Eclipse Neilson]

ECLIPSE NEILSON’S DRAMA WRITING SAMPLE.

DRAMA – The Nun and The Witch

SET-UP

These scenes are in the second act. Lunea and Athena have escaped Ukraine. Athena,Lunea’s daughter suffers from PTSD having lived through bombings and the horror of war. Lunea is trying to find her way as the new village witch in a conservative town and has recently open the store.

INT. LUNEA’S STORE – DAY

Lunea turns over the sign ‘OPEN. WELCOME TO HARBOR HEARTS MAGIC’ on the door of her small New Age store.

She puts the broom back behind the counter.

Turns on soft New Age type music. She smiles calmly.

Door chimes ring. She startles and looks over at the door.

Three teen boys (17) enter. They smirk at her, walk around the room pick up objects and carelessly toss them back down.

LUNEA

May I help you?

The teens look at each other. The tallest one struts over.

SCOTT

Do you ride brooms?

(laughs)

Lunea shakes her head in disgust.

JACKSON

Maybe she’ll ride us.

He grabs his crotch. They all laugh.

Lunea looks down and mutters to her self.

LUNEA

You fucking prick.

SETH a skinny, slightly inward type teen, pulls on the shoulder of Scott.

SETH

Have you seen her daughter? She’s beauti…ful.

He looks around timidly.

The other two nod no. Lunea looks up suspicious.

SCOTT

Why? Got something for her Seth?

Seth shrugs his shoulders.

SETH

Maybe. But she ignores me.

He hangs his head. The others laugh out loud and shove him.

One has lit a smudge stick and inhales it like it was pot.

SCOTT

You’re lucky she does. You don’t want to mess with her.

(loud whisper)

She’s a witch like her mother.

Lunea slowly looks over at him – has a rage filled stare.

LUNEA

(yells)

Get out of here!

Seth ignores her, strides over picks up a pendulum.

SETH

Does she love me? Does she not?

Swings it back and forth.

Scott closes the door and turns the open sign to close. He lets the chimes fall to the ground. MUSICAL CRASH AND CLANK of metal.

He struts over to Lunea.

SCOTT

You know what we do to witches in this town? My papa said …

LUNEA

Get out of here or I’ll call the police.

SCOTT

Go for it. Tell him it’s Scott Bently giving you trouble.

JACKSON

Hey lady, we don’t do trouble – we’d just having fun.

Lunea dials the phone. Keeps an eye on them.

FEMALE POLICE RECEPTIONIST (V.O.)

Hello Borrows Way police department. How may I direct your call.

LUNEA

This is Lunea Thunder from Harbor Heart Magic. There is a Scott Bently in my store and…

FEMALE POLICE RECEPTIONIST (O.S.)

(interrupts)

Scotti? Sweet kid – how may I help you? Is he alright?

LUNEA

I said I was from Harbor Heart Magic – I am the owner and Scott and his friends are threatening –

FEMALE POLICE RECEPTIONIST

– Harbor Heart Magic? That new witchy type store? Hmm, I wonder what they are doing there?…

LUNEA

Well it is not all witchy and I am trying to tell you! They are…

Seth bangs a brass gong it resonates over and over and grows louder. Drowning her voice. The others cackle loudly.

FEMALE POLICE RECEPTIONIST

(snooty tone)

I’m sorry Ma’am, I can’t understand… you are breaking up. You’ll have to call back…

CLICK and BUZZ on the phone. Lunea looks at it and then at the boys.

LUNEA

I can’t believe she hung up.

(mutters)

Fucking small town.

She starts to dial again.

The boys laugh and start tossing objects on the floor. Trashing the place.

Lunea hangs up the phone. Turns off the music.

SILENCE.

The boys watch her waiting to see what she will do.

She walks around the front of the counter.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

I’ll have to take care of this myself.

JACKSON

Lady, we don’t like witches in this

(smirks)

“Fucking small town” as you call it. God will make sure of that.

SCOTT

Yeah, wait till we tell Father Sinclair.

They laugh.

She grits her teeth.

LUNEA

Get out.

Scott steps forwards thrusts his chest in a macho way showing ever so sight uncertainty.

SCOTT

Make me.

Lunea on the verge of raging tears. Looks around the store, grabs a statue of the black Kali. Clutches the statue up in front of her and marches step by step toward the boys.

LUNEA

I will walk, step by step, ever so slowly towards you and I will remember your name, your face and I will …

A bright flash shoots out from the statue. Startles Lunea who holds on tightly.

The beeping gurgling sounds of the Council Universal Beings turn into a roar.

The teens look around at the strange sounds bouncing off the walls and run out.

Lunea follows them to the door. Stands at the doorway watches them run around the corner. Smiles.

A police car drives by – slows down – pauses- Lunea nods and waves them by.

Looks over at a glowing statue of Artemis and her dogs.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

Exactly! A dog is exactly what we need.

Lunea turns back to the store. Stops smiling as she looks around at the damage.

Falls to her knees. Begins to sob as she picks up the broken pieces of the glass candles holders and decorated bowls.

Stops and slowly looks up. Athena is standing in the doorway, looking down at the damage. Freezes in place in horror. Fear on her face.

ATHENA

Mama it’s happening again.

FLASHBACK Image of Ukraine’s destroyed buildings from the war on wall.

(O.S) Sudden Sound of a BOMB EXPLODING. SCREAMS.

EXT. LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Lunea sits on her porch steps, gazes up at the night sky next to her is a large bulldog SAINT. She has two bottles of beer. One is half empty.

Stands up looks down at Saint, raises bottle ceremoniously.

LUNEA

And thou shall be named Saint forevermore!

Drinks it to the end. Belches. Sits back down.

Turns to Saint grins and pats him.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

Who the hell do they think they are?

(mimics snobby Scott’s tone)

Good white boys-doing God’s work…

Opens the next bottle.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

Not the God I know – thought he was gentle – all loving walked with the poor. It’s all fucked up –

(Yells)

Fucked up damn it! What happened to you God? How did you end up like this?

She looks up at the sky, then over at a cauldron in the center of the yard. Shuffles over to a pile of stones on the edge.

She looks defeated – slumped shoulders. Looks down at the stones. Picks up one large thin flat one. Stares back up at the stars.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

Oh Mother, Holy one – hearth of my heart, fire of my soul, do we need to burn again? Please Goddess … please no…please.

She sways balancing the beer bottle on the stone and walks to the center of the yard where the large brass cauldron filled with water sits. Saint follows calmly and lays down in the center.

She raises it slightly above her head and places it on the ground next to the cauldron and whispers.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

For you my ancestors. You, who tried so hard to be understood by those who could only fear you…I place a stone in you honor.

Takes another sip of beer.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

May all Indigenous people, Earth Based Believers and Heart Centered Ones find courage to rise like the starry heavens.

She stumbles back to the pile of stones, guzzles the last bit of her beer and tosses the bottle over her shoulder.

Picks up a round stone. Raises it and turns to the East marches over to the eastern edge.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

To the powers of the East, where dawn rises as a new way to let the gentle breeze in our hearts find the gentle ones.

She carries another stone to the South and raises it.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

To the South. May my action always belong to the sacred fires of the Ancients.

Picks up the next stone and sashays toward the west

LUNEA (CONT’D)

To the West. May the waters of our earth and the great tides heal our ways.

She takes a smooth round stone and carries it to the North corner. Strokes it.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

To the powerful North where the Ancients await my return to the heavens.

She places the stone and heads back to the center of the circle and raises her right open hand to the heavens in priestess form.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

To all that is above

(left open palms to the earth)

To all that is below

(right hand stirs the center space)

And to all that stirs between.

She sits down and waits silently on the flat center stone. The moonlight lights her face. She closes her eyes.

CRICKETS CHIRP. PEEPERS and OTHER NIGHT SOUNDS.

Then SILENCE.

Suddenly a spiral of starry lights pours down from the heavens over her silently.

She hunches over and begins to weep in convulsions as the stars swirl around her and form a starry hooded robe.

Her tears calm. She opens her eyes and stares into the cauldron – the Aquila (The eagle) constellation reflects in the water. She whispers.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

Aquila.

Athena watches from the porch – a deep sadness in her gaze.

ATHENA

Don’t give up Mama. Don’t give up.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Joan I am also behind and missed the zoom meeting last week and am not quite sure what we are doing or how to see the zoom. my email is eclipsfey@aol.com

[Eclipse Neilson]

:Eclipse Neilson Key Business Decisions (place in first line)

1. Give us the decisions that are in your current High Budget script:

Genre DRAMA /SCI -FI
Title THE NUN AND THE WITCH
Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to discover that time is running out and hell has permeated their village.

Audience WOMEN25+ SPIRITUAL SEEKERS, LBGQ
Budget: 5-10 million
Lead Characters: The Nun and The Witch Father Steeples
Journey / Character Arc:
THE NUN destine to become a saint, must take on her power as a strong female leader when the Minister dies and haunts her ordering her to obey the rules.

THE WITCH must fulfill her destiny to help the nun become a saint and strong leader introducing a more inclusive perspective in the close-minded church.

FATHER SINCLAIR must save his soul as a ghost trying to get to heaven when evil demons block his way to heaven.

Opening / Ending
The Council of Universal Beings send the two female souls back to Earth to help save humanity by showing Love is greater than Hate.

Ending: After the murder of the Nun and the Witch the Villagers have an awakening and realize that “Love must be greater than Hate” and they lovingly honor the bond of the two women by burying them side by side on the pagan hill.

2. Tell us which of those decisions you could improve to make your script more marketable.

I need to improve the Witch’s character by what makes her more unique.

3. Answer the question “What I learned doing this assignment is…?” and put it at the top of your work.

I was able to focus more on the universal message of the script this time around.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

ECLIPSE NEILSON 10 Most Interesting Things (in the first line of your post)

10 Most Interesting Things

1. A witch and a nun become best friends.

2.The witch and the nun have been lovers in past lives and are twin flames.

3. The witch and the nun have been sent on a mission to help save humanity proving that Love must be greater than Hate.

4. They must experience one moment in time to change the course of history.

5. A minister is now a ghost trapped and haunted by demons and must help the nun and the witch on their mission to save his soul.

6. The minister leaves the nun to run the church.

7. They travel through time reliving historical moments of discrimination.

8.The Council of Universal Beings sends two female (twin flames) to save humanity – one is a nun and one is a witch.

9. The Nun is destined to become a saint this lifetime and the witch is there to make sure this happens.

10. The connections between Christianity and Pagan beliefs are woven together as a powerful healing force.

What is most unique about your villain and hero?

Father Sinclair (antagonist) Once a minister but now a ghost trapped between heaven and hell and possessed by demons trying to take over his soul – but to get to heaven he must heal his past by helping the Nun and the witch on their mission.

Lunea ( Protagonist) is a powerful village Witch, a psychic and a refugee from Ukraine trying to make it in a new country with her teen daughter who is being bullied because her mother is a witch.

Sister Anne ( Protagonist) is a timid nun, destined to become a saint this lifetime. She suddenly is left to step into her leadership role after the minister of her church dies. The problem is the congregation is mostly male-oriented and her best friend is a witch. But she has asecret rebellious streak.

B. Major hook of your opening scene?

The council of the Universal Beings send two souls (twin flames) back to earth through a time tunnel on a mission to help save the soul of humanity. They must prove love is greater than hate by living one moment in time that changes the course of the future of humanity.

C. Any turning points?

1.They travel through a time tunnel reliving their lives that are relevant to their mission. At the edge of the present time, they let go of each other and their memories.

2. They meet each other and quickly become friends- one is a nun -Sister Anne and the other is a witch- Lunea

3.The Old One, a wise woman, (secretly sent from the Council of the Universal Beings) guides them to ensure they accomplish the mission they were sent to do.

4. The town goes into an uproar and wants to destroy Lunea’s New Age store and get rid of the Nun. This sends them into hiding fearing for their life.

5. Sister Anne steps into her power and faces the congregation and leads the way.

6. Lune and Sister Anne and her daughter are shot. But a miracle happens and Athena lives. This opens the hearts of the town who see what their hatred has done.

D. Emotional dilemma?

Lunea realizes her mission is to help Sister Anne become a saint this lifetime. But it will be at a deeply painful cost and she begs the universe to not to be forced to carry it out.

E. Major twists

The Old One, a homeless street beggar but turns out to be a powerful healer sent from the Council of Universal Beings to help Lunea and Sister Anne.

Father Sinclair becomes a ghost trapped in the in-between and is fighting off demons trying to possess him. He will have to help Sister Anne return the sword in the church to the pagans.

F. Reversals?

The Nun takes on her power and leads the powerful witch on the mission.

Lunea shows her vulnerability.

G. Character betrayals?

The young teen in love with the witches’ daughter Athena becomes the murderer.

H. Or any big surprises?

Sister Anne falls in love with Lunea but Lunea must refuse her.

Lunea, Athena and Sister Anne are shot by a young teen who follows in his father’s footsteps with hatred and religious discrimination.

Lunea just before she dies is able to enact a miracle, though it looks like Sister Anne has. The town begins to realize at that moment that love must be greater than hate as they watch the Council of Universal Beings carry their souls back to heaven.

In the future, we see Lunea’s daughter has become the new minister in the church and it is hinted that she is the goddess Astrea.

Lunea and Sister lay in the same grave side by side – the gravestone reads “Here rest Priestess Lunea and Saint Anne side by side. Heart to heart – Soul to Soul for all Eternity.”

The constellation they have been creating lifetime after lifetime is Astrea and this is the final star formed in it.

Athena Lunea’s daughter becomes the” Goddess returned”

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[Eclipse Neilson]

ECLIPSE NEILSON DRAMA/SCI-FI

I chose this because in so many ways it shows the arc of my characters. But I have many other favorites- BEAST OF THE SOUTHER WILD, GIRL INTERRUPTED, CRASH ….

CONTACT SCI-FI/ DRAMA

ACT1

Eleanor demonstrates the brilliant scientific mind of a strong woman filled with vision and the emotional ability to take in new concepts must fight with everything she has to carry out her lifetime dream trying to be squashed by the sexist establishment, government’s authorities, and religious right.

She is the Seeker of truth, a powerful woman and represents humans to the universe and Never stops exploring with curiosity and emotional subtext fights sexism and nonbelievers, and struggles to be spiritual.

ACT2

Powerful woman standing in her truth, Carries wounded childhood and is willing to take risks against the establishment and fight for intelligence.

From a curious scientific-analytical mind to emotional-filled spiritual awareness and fighting for

Her deep loss of her father when she was nine. He believed in her and taught her passion for star research. In some ways his death is the loss of her faith and yet the foundation of her faith.

ACT3

She is a women trying to establish her in a sexist society. She is a scientist embodying integrity and embracing a spiritual reality versus a religious one. She is not valued by her peers but she fights all to be who she is – a woman with a vision wanting to travel to the stars to represent humanity.

When she arrives through the wormhole and sees, feels, and experiences beauty – the heavens in a visceral way. Her scientific understanding, the child-like innocence, her brilliant mind, and a newfound spiritual understanding as her father’s image speaks to her – and gives her a profound message from the aliens.

IN ACT 4

She is at a hearing defending her findings. The that is trying to make her look delusional and she courageously, powerfully and emotionally delivers a monologue that is core to her character arc – from scientific – to emotional to another form of spiritual awareness. She risks it all but with extraordinary integrity stays true to herself her passion.

[Eclipse Neilson]

(Eclipse Neilson) Meets Producer/Manager

How will you present yourself and your project to the producer

I am an optioned screenwriter and an award-winning author. I specialize in drama with strong female leads. I work on inspirational sci-fi and political topics on the environment, animal rights, women’s issues and discrimination in all areas.

Answer the question “What I learned today is…?”

I learned to let the managers know your skill set and your credibility. Do not mislead or waste their time.

[Eclipse Neilson]

THE NUN AND THE WITCH DRAMA / SCI-FI

Logline. A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to discover that time is running out and hell has permeated their village.

2. Look through the 10 Components of Marketability and pick a few that have the most potential for selling this script.

X . Unique.
X. Great Title.
X. Timely.
X. It’s a first.

3. Do a quick brainstorm session about ways to elevate the components you chose for this script and tell us how you might pitch the script through those components.

1.No one has dared to bring these two warring religions together and show thier possible greater strengths together. (Though inspired by Romeo and Juliet theme)

I continue to use well-known excerpts from both traditions.

2. To add to the target audience it shares the love between two souls over lifetimes of strife and discrimination that gets a chance in their current lifetime.

To carefully weave a story through scenes that entice but do not offend.

3. The Sci-Fi genre helps share the bigger picture both visually and conceptually.

I use the journey through time as a dramatic wake-up call for the protagonist and help define the antagonist. I also use the journey through history to reinforce my commitment as a writer to addressing religious discrimination in so many ways hopefully to help create change.

4. The lead characters- two women stepping into their power to fight hatred.

I have made them relatable – the witch has escaped from Ukraine with her teen daughter- she is a single mom deeply caring for her daughter.

I have made the humble nun given unexpectedly a leadership role in the church and her struggle to unite an anger-filled congregation who see her as a woman and should not have a leadership role.

4.“What I learned doing this assignment is…to remember what your concept is and how you can strengthen the roles.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Project and Market

Give us your Genre, Title, and Concept.

Drama/Sci-FI

THE NUN AND THE WITCH DRAMA

A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – a witch, to help battle the evils of hatred, only to discover that time is running out for humanity and the demons of hell have permeated their village.

2. In one or two sentences, tell us what you think is most attractive about your story.

My script addresses current issues of discrimination in a variety of areas, has strong female roles and brings together two warring religions to help heal the divide in humanity.

3. Tell us which you will target FIRST — managers, producers, or actor’s production company — and why you picked that target.

Producers and managers. At this moment I have a producer who might be interested. I am giving her time since she is already working on another project of mine.

4. Answer the question “What I learned today is…?”

That the winning formula is a producer who loves your work and can get things made.

[Eclipse Neilson]

ECLIPSE NEILSON Credibility is Going Up!

I have 4 /4 considers out of my 4 scripts that have had coverage. I will have THE NUN AND THE WITCH get get coverage soon.

I am an optioned screenwriter. I have two other producers working on a current project targeting Sept 2023 for shooting. They are working on the investors right now.

I have an award-winning novel and one honorable mention for a memoir. The Novel is the subject for one of my scripts.

I have 5 books published.

I am being trained by a producer right now around all the ins and outs of production.

I am currently serving as a director/coach for the talent for the newest project.

I have completed the MSC 15 certificate program

The Pro series

The Profound class

The comedy class

The roles for the actors

Almost finished WIM

Working on writing assignments

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[Eclipse Neilson]

ECLIPSE NEILSON Project and Market

( I am including two complete scripts because one I might be in dialogue with my producer about in the next few weeks)

1. THE NUN AND THE WITCH DRAMA / SCI-FI (completed) (5- 15 million)

a) A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – a witch, to help battle the evils of hatred, only to discover that time is running out for humanity and the demons of hell have permeated their village.

b) My script addresses current issues of discrimination in a variety of areas, has strong female roles and brings together two warring religions to help heal the divide in humanity.

2. ELEPHANT’S PRAYER DRAMA (completed) 5- 10 million

a) Inspired by a true story. An offbeat single mom has a long-time mystical bond with an old zoo elephant and sets out to free her from a life of chains. Little does she know it would be a town she would have to free from the grips of corruption first to accomplish her task.

b) my script is Inspired by a true story and the award-winning novel – Stand in my heart- an elephant’s prayer which I have the legal rights to. It focuses on the plight of elephants and demonstrates what happens when determined women of all ages come to rescue their town’s neglected elephant. There is a powerful female hero/activist and a strong matriarchal woman of color who teaches the old ways of her tribal people’s passion for all species.

MAKE ME AN ANGEL Drama (not complete)

A psychically gifted runaway teen has lost hope for anything but a tortured street life, when she and her dog is taken in by an eccentric, once-famous, aging hippie folksinger/activist who has lost her purpose in life and is secretly on the verge of suicide. The two realize they are each other’s last bit of hope and must join forces to heal and find a new dream together.

What I learned from e zoom call is to keep it simple -find your genre, stick with it and build your identity within the genre.

• This reply was modified 2 years, 2 months ago by  Eclipse Neilson.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Yes

[Eclipse Neilson]

1. I am Eclipse Neilson

2. I have written 5 scripts, one is optioned and one is with a producer who is aiming for production this September.

3.I hope to find ways to get writing assignments, learn the business side and as always improve my writing skills

4. Something unique, special, strange or unusual about you?

Back in the 90’s I rescued a lonely elephant from deplorable conditions in a run-down zoo where she had been chained for 40 years. I lead a campaign and took on a corrupt town to free her to an animal sanctuary, where she was free from chains for the rest of her life and finally lived with another elephant.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Jane yes, Our genres are different but that should make it interesting.

[Eclipse Neilson]

I have a mystical /sci-fi /drama THE NUN AND THE WITCH and I am ready to exchange

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson loves proofreading

Vision: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH genre: Mystical Sci-fi

A dedicated nun, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to discover that time is running out and hell has permeated their village.

This is the hardest for me because my mind often goes faster and misses a mistake. I practiced reading last scene first and going backward. I randomly went to a scene and read it looking for typos and hanging words and whatever else.

I also continue t improve here and there a scene’s intensity and purpose.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson loves Wordsmithing

Vision: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH genre: Mystical Sci-fi

A dedicated nun, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to discover that time is running out and hell has permeated their village.

I love the detailed questioning of the value of the sentences both in dialogue and scene descriptions. I make sure details are relevant to the story and show up in other areas.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Has Tested Every Line!

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH genre: Mystical Sci-fi

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to discover that time is running out and hell has permeated their village.

BEFORE

INT. SCHOOL CORRIDOR – SAME DAY

Athena comes around the corner. Walks over to her locker. Opens the locker door puts her books away. Turns around. Teens have lined up on either side with raised hands making the sign of the cross.

SILENCE turn into low WHISPERS of mockery grow into HECKLES.

Seth jumps in front of her. Turns to the others.

SETH

Hey, maybe we should stop.

Athena shoves him aside. He trips and falls backward.

The other teens laugh at him. His face begins to morph into hatred.

SETH (CONT’D)

Fuck you! No witch is going to make a fool out of me!

He gets up and joins the crowd with crossed fingers.

SCOTT

She’s real bad. She made you look like a stupid love lost fool.

Scott laughs at him. Seth runs away down the hall yelling.

SETH

Burn bitch! Burn!

Athena walks slowly through the passage of mocking teens, head held high, looks ahead as she passes each student.

She is on the verge of tears. Picks up her pace. Gets to the door- Runs out the back metal door, which slams shut. BANG.

AFTER

INT. SCHOOL CORRIDOR – SAME DAY

Athena comes around the corner to the empty hall of lockers. Walks over to hers, and opens it. Puts her books away. Turns around.

Teens have quietly lined up on either side with raised hands making the sign of the cross. Smirks on their faces.

Low WHISPERS of mockery, grows into HECKLES.

Seth jumps in front of her. Turns to the others.

SETH

Hey, maybe we should stop.

Athena head held high, shoves him aside. He trips and falls backward.

The other teens laugh at him. His face morphs into hatred.

SETH (CONT’D)

Fuck you! No witch is going to make a fool out of me!

He gets up and joins the crowd with crossed fingers.

SCOTT

She’s real bad. She made you look like a stupid love-lost fool.

Scott laughs at him. Seth runs away down the hall yelling.

SETH

Burn bitch! Burn!

Athena walks slowly through the passage of mocking teens. Stares ahead as she passes each student’s morphing face.

She is on the verge of tears. Picks up her pace. Gets to the door – Runs out. The metal door, slams shut. BANG.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson loves Monologues

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH genre: Mystical Sci-fi

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to discover that time is running out and hell has permeated their village.

I have a few monologues a very powerful one when Lunea speaks about the suffering of witches. It is where she finally breaks in her anger at the world for discriminating against her.

I have a slow evolution of Sisters Anne stepping into her power as a spiritual leader when she speaks to the congregation after she sees the hatred growing in the village.

I have a small monologue when the ghost of Father Sinclair realizes he in his lifetime was part of the problem.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson loves Subtext pointers

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH genre: Mystical Sci-fi

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to discover that time is running out and hell has permeated their village.

2. I increased the metaphors in the past life scenes.

In a conversation between Lunea and Athena her teen daughter( both from Ukraine) reminisce s about the Berehynia statue in Kiev. I show how even as a child Athena wants to be the Goddess- though I never use the word Goddess in the 4th ACT it all comes together.

I play around through 4 or 5 scenes with Eve and the biting the apple metaphor from the garden of Eden.

There are many more in the script and I love this type of writing exercise!

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson loves covering subtext

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH genre: Mystical Sci-fi

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to discover that time is running out and hell has permeated their village.

What I discover I often write as if my characters or living in both inner and outer subtext. This script is a good one for subtext because it is based on looking at discrimination how people hide and or find themselves ….

I tweaked a few areas and added a bit of dialogue.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson loves Anticipatory Dialogue.

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH genre: Mystical Sci-fi

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to discover that time is running out and hell has permeated their village.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that I have a lot of setups. The opening and first 10 pages give you a good idea of the tragedies these two souls have had lifetime after lifetime. So by the time we get to the present, we are wondering and worried that this lifetime might be the same.

Many many scenes have clues and warnings something could happen- between teens wrecking Lunea’s store, Athena’s constant bullying and fears from having escaped the war in Ukraine …..

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse loves Attack / Counterattack Dialogue

VISION:

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

The Nun and The Witch genre: Mystical Sci-fi

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to discover that time is running out and hell has permeated their village.I

NT. PARISH KITCHEN – DAY

Father Sinclair and Sister Anne sit across from each other. They sip their soup.

Suddenly he starts coughing out of control. He grabs his napkin, motions for more water.

Sister Anne jumps up and pours him more. He guzzles it. She stands by his side, hands folded, waiting.

He pauses and relaxes back into his chair. He spots blood on his napkin, horrified he hides it.

She sees it too but looks away.

FATHER SINCLAIR

Lets have our cookies and tea over a good game of chess!

(teases)

I need to beat you – I need a win somewhere in my life.

He hobbles over to the small chess table already set up. Flops down in an easy chair.

She starts to clear the table.

He waves his hand.

FATHER SINCLAIR (CONT’D)

Do them later. Come sit down.

Sister Anne walks over.

SISTER ANNE

Father Sinclair, you need not be so harsh on yourself. Your people love you. You’re already a winner remember God loves you.

He ignores her statement. Contemplates what move he will make. Moves pawn forward.

FATHER SINCLAIR

We need to have a talk.

She looks up a bit worried. Moves her pawn forward.

SISTER ANNE

We do?

FATHER SINCLAIR

When you get older sometimes the truth matters.

Sister Anne stares, swallows and waits.

SISTER ANNE

The truth?

FATHER SINCLAIR

Yes, God has told me I must confide in you. He has plans for you.

Moves his knight. She picks up her knight – fondles it as she looks up at him.

SISTER ANNE

Me?…What kind of plans? I am just a nun following the ways of Jesus.

He nods dismissively. Slides his castle forward.

FATHER SINCLAIR

The church – our small little chapel with its grand windows and loyal congregation… I want you to take a bit more of a leadership role.

Sister Anne shuffles in her seat uncomfortably. Stares at down the board.

SISTER ANNE

I love the windows and I’m happy to keep the parish in order …but

(looks up)

Leadership role? I am not for that.

Father Sinclair nods yes and ignores her apprehension.

FATHER SINCLAIR

You know I arrived here in this town, when I was about your age. In those days things were different – the people talked a lot about love and peace and flowers.

(chuckles)

I suppose we could have called them Hippie Christians.

Sister Anne smiles and begins to sing softly.

SISTER ANNE

“All you need is love”

She moves her knight again forward.

FATHER SINCLAIR

Exactly! But God forgot to tell me as the years went by that we needed money too. Money to survive to keep this little chapel open… The main church always wanted their dues paid – no matter what. Knight to knight!

He moves his queen sideways.

SISTER ANNE

They do good work in the world and need funds.

FATHER SINCLAIR

Yes they do. But…everything is political.

Sister Anne looks up at him, tilts her head questioning him. Smirks.

SISTER ANNE

But? You mean my bishop is in the right place?

She uses her bishop and takes his knight. Giggles.

FATHER SINCLAIR

I was going to leave get transferred out of Barrow Ways.

(mutters))

They didn’t see our importance.

SISTER ANNE

Oh no!… Really?

FATHER SINCLAIR

But! God said I must stay and teach people the rules. The rules of God and the church. The rules I was raised by to be a good Christian. The world was becoming wild and God was getting angry. I needed to save our people. But…

She laughs to her self.

SISTER ANNE

There’s always a but.

He coughs and looks at her. Pauses. Moves his bishop to face her queen.

FATHER SINCLAIR

But, the church stopped giving us money for rent. The two men came one day and closed us down officially. And…

SISTER ANNE

And?

FATHER SINCLAIR

My brother bought the place – he owned the building til he died.

Sister Anne’s jaw drops. Quickly moves her queen aside.

SISTER ANNE

Did you ever tell anyone?

FATHER SINCLAIR

I’m telling you.

SISTER ANNE

Why me of all people?

FATHER SINCLAIR

Why not?

He sips his tea looks directly at her. She looks back aghast.

FATHER SINCLAIR (CONT’D)

I never told anyone. I used the money we had saved for a camp, to give my brother. I had been stashing away for a long, long time. It felt like stealing…

Sister Anne looks at him gently nods yes.

SISTER ANNE

It was stealing but for–

He breaks down in tears.

FATHER SINCLAIR

–God told me to do so and to make sure his words and rules never got lost in the shuffle.

Sister Anne stares speechless.

FATHER SINCLAIR (CONT’D)

God’s law will not be changed, bought or lost!

He looks up at her clutching the chess piece.

FATHER SINCLAIR (CONT’D)

You must continue with God’s law.

SILENCE.

Sister Anne looks up at him and fondles her queen.

SISTER ANNE

I have a secret too.

He tilts his head curiously.

FATHER SINCLAIR

You do?

Sister Anne nervously takes deep breath and spurts out.

SISTER ANNE

I ran away from the nunnery…But, I am a good nun in my heart! Just not a real nun in the eyes of the church.

She moves her queen forward. He smiles as he moves his queen to face her king.

FATHER SINCLAIR

Check!….I knew that.

She looks up at him surprised.

SISTER ANNE

You did?

FATHER SINCLAIR

Promise me you will follow in my footsteps and take over.

She startles. Looks worried. Shakes her head no in fear.

FATHER SINCLAIR (CONT’D)

Don’t worry I will prepare them for that time when it comes.

SISTER ANNE

I can’t! I love Jesus but, but I don’t know if I can…lead.

FATHER SINCLAIR

You must.

SISTER ANNE

I was angry and I ran away from the rules. Don’t you understand? I am shamed by the church.

FATHER SINCLAIR

God wants you to do this…and he rules!

They stare at each other.

FATHER SINCLAIR (CONT’D)

Promise me.

She bows her head, struggles with her answer and finally nods yes.

He sighs with relief. His face looks haggard and worried. He shows her where to move her king.

FATHER SINCLAIR (CONT’D)

You know,… I’m scared too.

Sister Anne looks up surprised. They stare at each other. He half chuckles as if to dismiss his first statement. Then pauses with a bit of a furrowed brow.

FATHER SINCLAIR (CONT’D)

God has not shown me how to die.

Sister Anne’s eyes brim,’looks across the room. Jesus is standing there. He nods to her.

SISTER ANNE

Jesus was afraid too, remember? He wept alone while they slept in the garden of Gethsemane.

Father Sinclair looks up pauses and then smiles.

FATHER SINCLAIR

See! You will do well as a leader.

SISTER ANNE

I’ll be there for you. I won’t be like them …I wont sleep when you call for me.

FATHER SINCLAIR

If God wills it.

He reaches over the table for her hand, knocking over the pieces on the playing board.

SOUND OF PIECES DROPPING ON FLOOR.

Sister Anne holds his hand in both of hers reassuringly.

[Eclipse Neilson]

(Eclipse Neilson) Dialogue Structures

VISION:

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

What I learned from doing this assignment is to keep being open to unexpected possibilities.

I worked on a few scenes- one being on the hill with the stone henge, type Goddess where both characters Lunea and Sister Anne begin their friendship as Sister Anne unexpectedly shares a few secrets about her past.

Their dialogue helps us see how their perspective is similar but from different origins.

The subtext they are soulmates and have traveled many lifetimes and in many scenes this connection is shown in subtext.

There is a deeper layer of mutual attraction and familiarity but it is beneath the surface.

I worked on a few scenes- one being on the hill with the stone henge, type Goddess where both characters Lunea and Sister Anne begin their friendship as Sister Anne unexpectedly shares a few secrets about her past.

Excerpt from the scene too long to share.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

Now imagine you are a little one again – and all is calm.

Sister Anne quickly opens her eyes, turns towards Lunea with a sad haunted – a bit angry look. Announces.

SISTER ANNE

It was never calm.

She frowns and reverts back to her humble pose.

Lunea catches the shift. Pauses takes Sister Anne’s presence.

LUNEA

What happened?

SILENCE

SISTER ANNE

I lost her when I was six.

LUNEA

Who?

SISTER ANNE

My Mama…cancer.

Her face looks like a heartbroken angry child. Lunea bites her lip trying not to react.

Lunea reaches over and puts her hand on Sister Anne’s shoulder.

Sister Anne shakes her head no and sits back up. Puts her knees under her chin. Looks around and picks a round small stone. Drops it from hand to hand.

SISTER ANNE (CONT’D)

I was so angry at the angels that night.

Grips the stone in her palm.

LUNEA

I’ve heard that the angels come when it’s hard.

Sister Anne shakes her head sadly.

SISTER ANNE

They are the messenger of truth-they never lie but… they didn’t tell me they were taking her away that night… They were just silent…so, so, so silent.

Lunea picks an aster, holds it as if in prayer, closes her eyes, and breathes in its scent.

LUNEA

I see you – a little one, standing in the dark silence…you were scared.

She lays the flower between them.

SISTER ANNE

But I’m an adult now.

(Sits up straighter)

and I’ve come to understand that for her, it was better than trying to live…God brought my Mama home to his heart.

She smiles. Then frowns.

LUNEA

I can’t think of anything worst than a mother looking at her child knowing she is leaving forever.

SILENCE

Sister Anne throws the stone down like an angry teen.

SISTER ANNE

My Mother gave up! That’s my truth. My father beat her until the end.

Looks at Lunea questioning her. Jumps up and rushes towards the path. Lunea runs after her.

LUNEA

Anne wait, no wait.

She catches up to her and takes her hand and gently leads her back to the stone.

SISTER ANNE

Why am I telling you all this?

Lunea picks up the stone, hands it back to her and gently closes Sister Anne’s palm over it. Gently pleads.

LUNEA

Don’t leave…Please.

Sister Anne nods calmly.Sighs. Hangs her head and sits down. Lunea joins her.

SISTER ANNE

(whispers)

The screams finally stopped.

Lunea looks at her with compassion. Sister Anne turns away and lays back down.

LUNEA

Lets imagine she is standing in front of you healed and now she is a strong woman, a fierce woman – one who now is able to protect you…Like an angel.

Sister Anne ponders Lunea’s suggestion, closes her eyes, relaxes and takes a deep breath.

Her arms are slightly stretched by her side.

Lunea has the same pose. They open their eyes and stare up at the sky.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

Your mother’s story is the Goddess’- she too was abused and abandoned by the patriarch. She’ll understand your pain.

Sister Anne closes her eyes. (Beat)

SISTER ANNE

It is strange, but I can feel your truth as if my heart knows what my mind can’t understand.

Sister Anne opens her eyes turns to Lunea. They both smile shyly and then quickly look back up at the sky.

At the exact same moment they close their eyes again.

The tall stone towers over them looking like a protector.

They lay silently side by side their hands so close their pinky fingers almost touch each other.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Elevated Dialogue

THE NUN AND THE WITCH : SCI-FI/MYSTICAL DRAMA

VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her beloved soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to discover that time is running out and hell has permeated their village.

I love going through the script one character at time.

I tweaked quite a few sentences. I post some of them with back and forth dialogue

SAMPLE ELEVATED LINES AND DIALOGUE

1.THE COUNCIL OF UNIVERSAL BEINGS LEADER 1

You only have a very short portal of time to succeed, to shift this divide – this quake in the heart of your species. Remember it takes just one moment in time to begin the beginning of the great change -one moment.

He gives Lunea a star map that is inscribed on a transparent tablet.

THE COUNCIL LEADER

Become that moment in time.

2.LUNEA

Perhaps our lifetimes together are simply holographic reflections of our soul’s journey.

3. LUNEA

I can’t think of anything worst than a mother looking at her child knowing she is leaving forever.

4.SISTER ANNE

It is strange, but I can feel your truth as if my heart knows what my mind can’t understand.

5.FATHER SINCLAIR

You know I arrived here in this town, when I was about your age. In those days things were different – the people talked a lot about love and peace and flowers.

(chuckles)

I suppose we could have called them Hippie Christians.

6. LUNEA

(chuckles)

My dear friend, do you ever rebel?

Sister Anne stares at the mare and then at Lunea. Bows her head in shame. Grins. Peers up at Lunea.

SISTER ANNE

Pistachios.

Lunea makes an inquisitive face.

LUNEA

Pistachios?

Sister Anne smirks and nods yes. Leans over and whispers.

SISTER ANNE

I eat them in church it’s my before breakfast snack and my breaking the rules I suppose or my addiction.

7.LUNEA (CONT’D)

I held her but what can a mother do? Bombs … sirens … screams… and then the dreaded wails for the dead.

Lunea has a silent heart broken look. Sister Anne feels Lunea’s pain and begins to tear up.

LUNEA (CONT’D)

(voice breaks)

I was a mother who didn’t know which way to go to save her child.

(yells)

Damn it! I didn’t know which way in that moment where to run with my child’s hand in mine…

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Elevated Interest

THE NUN AND THE WITCH : SCI-FI/MYSTICAL DRAMA

VISION:

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

I worked on many scenes adding a bit more interest in the setting, dialog, and two characters getting to know each other.

Built more of Sister Anne finding her rebellious side in quirky ways added a little OCD to her character as subtext for control.

added it bit more humor to Lunea asa balance for hidden grief.

added a bit of symbolic scenery to Athena’s bedroom.

might change one scene to the graveyard.

over all I tweaked here and there if needed in every scene, making sure I accomplished what I set out to do.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson LOVES CHARACTER DEPTH

THE NUN AND THE WITCH : SCI-FI/MYSTICAL DRAMA

VISION:

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

I added emotional intensity through the personal interchanges with both Sister Anne holding back her anger- in a few scenes. I had her resentment spill out a bit. Both Anne and Lunea struggle to trust each other.

I added Lunea’s fear of failing as a mother and her pain from escaping the war of Ukraine and seeing how it has affected her daughter Athena.

I added Athena expressing her anger at her Mom for not openly protecting her and being too much of a visionary.

I added Father Sinclair’s fear of death, and his struggle to redeem himself after he is a ghost – I made him a bit more desperate at times. Also, I intensified his evil shapeshifting and intensified his struggle to hold onto his sanity.

I added Seth’s anger at Athena for not liking him.

[Eclipse Neilson]

<div>Eclipse Neilson Credibility is Going Up</div>

Your Writing Sample 4 considers from coverage

‘Recommend’ from Coverage 5 CONSIDERS
Delivers on the genre in a strong way yes
Delivers on the business decisions Yes

2. Screenwriting Accomplishments

Smaller deals (options, sales, writing assignments)
Yes three different producers working with me – one on an early script which is next in line to go into preproduction.
And two producers working on preproduction
2 writing awards (books) -my novel an elephants prayer- and
my memoir Mother Ghost

3. Google your name. How many items on the first page show you as a professional screenwriter?

Once as a screenwriter but Mentioned 12 times as a writer and images of my books

4. Your Network

At least a 1200 on linkedin related to the film industry

5 . Borrowed Credibility

Working with 3 producer on two different scripts one is optioned the other I own the rights.

8. Other forms of credibility that is related to screenwriting:

Novels published -one novel , one memoir and one collection of short stories all used in my screenwriting
Skilled in the subjects I write about.

Possible things I can do

Maybe contest

Continue to network with the producer teams I am working with and follow up other producers that were interested in my work.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Projects and Insights

1. Tell us the two projects you’re bringing into this class and give us a budget range for each; each project must be:

I am working on a new script.

MAKE ME AN ANGEL: Drama / Fantasy (Budget 5-10 million)

b. A finished script. AN ELEPHANT’S PRAYER

Genre: Drama /Fantasy Budget 5-10 million (Inspired by a true story and the award-winning Novel (I have the rights .)

or

or a comedy CANES TO WANDS that I recently finished and have a consider from coverage. The comedy 1-2 million project. (Has a good role for an older A list actress.)

2. Tell us what you learned from the opening teleconference.

I learned from today’s call was quite a few things, but what stood out for me was as follows.

To take notes so as to get an idea what the producer wants.

See if the producer has already another writer – or get an outline if possible.

It is important to be willing to write from the producer’s perspective and be willing to make changes.Important to see how the producer

To be willing to do a treatment for free.

• This reply was modified 2 years, 4 months ago by  Eclipse Neilson.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson

I have written 6 scripts. I have one optioned and am working with 2 other producers as part of the top line on another script.

I hope to learn as much as possible since one producer as suggested I might work with her on another script she has written.

I would say my name is unique and how I received it through a vision quest. I am a visionary activist and an award-winning author and lead eco-feminist spirituality retreats for decades

[Eclipse Neilson]

AGREE, in which case, you Reply to this topic and include three things at the top of the page:

1. .Eclipse Neilson

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I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.

3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.

4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.

5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.

6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.

This completes the Group Release Form for the class.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson LOVES CHARACTER DEPTH

THE NUN AND THE WITCH : SCI-FI/MYSTICAL DRAMA

VISION:

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

I absolutely love deep characters in everything I write!

“What I learned from doing this assignment is…? ”

I learned there is alway more depth and setups possible.

Depth Tool 1: Added Lunea’s struggle with her decision to have stayed in Ukraine with her daughter, (Athena) for as long as she did.

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Depth Tool 2: What are they hiding from me?

1.Lunea’s guilt that she had signed papers to divorce her husband, just before the bombs dropped and killed him.

2.Father Sinclair seeks help from the demons’ torture.

3.Depth Tool 3 : Sister Anne (earlier reveal) she has fallen in love with Lunea.

4)Depth Tool 4: How can this story trigger the character?</div><div>

1.The building of Lunea’s and Sister Annne’s friendship and their mystical mission.

2Anthena’s struggles to stand in her power against the bullies.

4). Tell us the changes you made using these tools.

1.Added dialog with Lunea and Athena-

2.set up a scene with Lunea and Father Sinclair.

3.Added Sinclair reaching out for help and Lunea the one who forgives him.

4.I showed Lunea’s deep struggle between following her sacred mission, knowing it might turn out to be painful for all.

5). At the top of the page, tell us your one-sentence vision for your success from this program.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

I am still looking for two more writers to exchange. If you are ready now to exchange please send and the first to arrive will be my first exchange. I am free all day to work on the scripts. Thanks my email is eclipsfey@aol.com

THE NUN AND THE WITCH Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity knowing that time is running out for all.

[Eclipse Neilson]

ok and mine is eclipsfey@aol.com

• This reply was modified 2 years, 5 months ago by  Eclipse Neilson.

[Eclipse Neilson]

I am ready for an exchange. But have to admit I am not good at horror.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH Genre: (mystical /drama Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity- knowing that time is running out.

[Eclipse Neilson]

VISION:

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

The Nun and The Witch genre: Mystical Sci-fi

I think there are a few scenes I wish to ponder. What I struggled with is when a scene follows an intense one and is followed by “life goes on elsewhere,” I was not sure if it flowed and could possibly be jolting or if just kept the tension going. I might have to wait until we exchange to find that out.

[Eclipse Neilson]

VISION:

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue my career.

The Nun and The Witch genre: Mystical Sci-fi

One might say a scene in my 4th ACT near the end is a cliche but for now I want the audience to make the connection. Otherwise, I feel good. I absolutely love grid 3.

[Eclipse Neilson]

VISION:

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity knowing that time is running out.

I strengthened both lead characters.

I gave Lunea an impactful monologue.

I put more subtext between the protagonist

I strengthened the Old One and tweaked other characters.

I personally love this process and know my writing can always get better and by staying focused on what is assigned he keeps me on task.

[Eclipse Neilson]

VISION:

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place as I make happy money to continue.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Script doesn’t match the pitch. Needed to tweak pitch a bit

(Old) Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

(New)Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint in this lifetime, bonds with her soulmate – the village witch to help battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity knowing that time is running out.

I moved a few scenes- and worked on the relationship with Lunea and her daughter Athena.

I brought in a minor character THE OLD ONE who serves as mentor role and ties in the Council of the universal Beings introduced in the opening . She is introduced in the first act.

I developed the antagonist showing his battle with evil spirits after he has died and is stuck between realms.

I went deeper with-Sister Anne’s bond with Jesus.

I went deep with the bond between Sister Anne and Lunea Thunder

Overall I find myself going deeper with the characters in the scenes and heightening the emotional experiences.

[Eclipse Neilson]

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning, successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

HOW IT WENT. I finished Act 4. looking forward to seeing what Hal will have us do in the second draft.

[Eclipse Neilson]

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning, successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

HOW IT WENT. I finished ACT 3 and Act 4. Will look back over for simple typos and wait to see what we do in the second draft.

[Eclipse Neilson]

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning, successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

HOW IT WENT. might work a little bit on the action aspect on the last scene in ACT 3. .

[Eclipse Neilson]

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning, successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

HOW IT WENT. A bit of touch up for the last scene in Act 3 . I will need to fill in a few scenes in the second draft to have decent page count. I noted there is a lot of visual action in this script. Will work on some dialogue.

[Eclipse Neilson]

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning, successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

HOW IT WENT. I think right now what I am seeing as a problem that I will have to fix is that my dialogue at times s too on the nose. By draft two it should hopefully be better.

[Eclipse Neilson]

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning, successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

HOW IT WENT. I am working hard to just keep moving forward. I am close to the end of Act 3 but will need to add a few new scenes in the second draft. Had a family loss and could get myself to write but will try tomorrow.

[Eclipse Neilson]

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning, successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

HOW IT WENT. I was really pleased with a scene and a monologue I wrote this week.

[Eclipse Neilson]

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning, successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

What I learned from doing this assignment is…That i have many typos.LOL I have completed ACT 2. and am into ACT 3. One scene might need to be moved.

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

HOW IT WENT. seeing the development of the characters. Everything is moving quickly and feel I most likely will need to add a few scenes.

[Eclipse Neilson]

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning, successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

What I learned from doing this assignment is…that my sense of discipline works well with speed writing. I have completed ACT 2.

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson: Lesson 4 First Draft Part 1

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning, successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

What I learned from doing this assignment is…that some of my structure order needed to be switched and a few scenes added so as to stay on course.

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

How the process went for me: I am now in the 2nd act and the story is feeling more alive and inspires me to write more. I am excited about the script. For awhile the scenes weren’t hooking me and ai had to keep reminding myself first draft 30%. But then I happened to research a piece of Celtic music and played it as I wrote the scene and it felt perfect – exactly what I was looking for and now with the music in the background I am once again inspired and in the flow.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson: Lesson 3 First Draft Part 1

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

What I learned from doing this assignment is…that some of my structure order needed to be switched.

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (Sci-fi/mystical drama)

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

How the process went for me: I pasted my outline and have worked scene by scene. I have completed the first act! feel basically good but know it needs lots more work.LOL

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson

My Vision:

I want to be a great award-winning ,successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

What I learned from doing this assignment is…just keep going and I do a lot of spelling mistakes while writing fast.lOL

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (Sci-fi)

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

How the process went for me: The first few pages easy -lots of action. The dialog in the next scenes will need work. I remind myself this is about writing fast not perfection.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

What I learned from doing this assignment is…The first scene was easy. Mostly visuals.

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (Sci-fi)

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

How the process went for me: I pasted my outline and have worked scene by scene. Sometimes it is easy and flows sometimes it is harder and I needed to stop to do some research for a few historical facts.

[Eclipse Neilson]

I have exchanged twice and waiting for my third one’s feedback. The first two were incredibly helpful.

[Eclipse Neilson]

I am back and will be exchanging with Jacqueline Murphy next.

[Eclipse Neilson]

I will be away until Thursday but will be looking for exchanges. I do need some feedback. Tom is one but to make up i will need more. My script is a scy-fi mystical drama – THE NUN AND THE WITCH.

Email address: eclipsfey@aol.com

Genre: sci-fi, mystical drama

Concept: When a dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witchy type healer to achieve a sacred task from their past life together – all hell breaks out in the village

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson – Scene Requirements

THE NUN AND THE WITCH

1. VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

2. What I’ve Learned Doing This Assignment is to make sure the scenes move the story forward.

EXT.UNIVERSE – NIGHT

Lunea and Anne are instructed by the Council of Universal Beings to return to earth to save the heart humanity.

BEGINNING In timeless space two female silhouettes on a starry hill peacefully sit side by side. Anne has her head on the shoulder of Lunea. (intrigue)

MIDDLE the Council of Universal Beings appear and open the gateway to the dark time tunnel. (surprise, suspense)

END They resist but are swept away through the dark opening.(suspense, uncertainty)

INT. DARK TIME TUNNEL –

They travel to the beginning of their first life time of love in an Egyptian tomb as runaway slaves.

BEGINNING The two souls wisp through the roaring dark time tunnel.(suspense, uncertainty, interesting setting)

MIDDLE The peek through a crack in the wall of their first lifetime together in Egypt. (interesting setting)

END Lunea takes hands hand as the step forward into the Egyptian room. (suspense, uncertainty)

INT. EGYPTIAN TOMB – NIGHT

Their first life time they lovingly commit suicide trapped in their master’s tomb.(Father Sinclair)

BEGINNING Two Egyptian slave women place their oil lamps side by side and hold each other.

MIDDLE the drink serpentine poison.Hold each other lovingly. Close there eyes, smile and die.

END SISTER ANNE and LUNA as shadowy spirits quickly move forward. WOOSH

INT. TIME TUNNEL – NIGHT (MONTAGE)

Events flash on the walls on the time tunnel as they travel and pause at two of their life times till the come to the door of the present.

BEGINNING: The 1920’s two female archeologist discover grave of two women skeletons in same position. They look at each other – and quickly cover up the grave knowing it is them.

MIDDLE: Fast forward Auschwitz two women stare at each other painfully as one (Lunea )is taken away holding the hand of a little frightened girl(Athena 6)By a Nazi(Father Sinclair) soldier.

END arrive in front of large metal door with the blood painted words THE REMEMBERING. It CREAKS open. (suspense)

INT.TIME TUNNEL – NIGHT

They step into the present holding hands – try not to let go of each other’s hand but fail and vanish.

BEGINNING: They step into the present holding hands.Loud Sounds sky scrapper – newscast of Ukraine war. Hear a violin.

MIDDLE: They turn around and see the other side of the door the words -THE FORGETTING.

END: They try not to let go of each others hand but fail and vanish.(surprise)

INT. ATHENA’S ROOM – NIGHT (MONTAGE)

Athena (17) gazes out of the window at the moon as she plays the violin. Haunted sad look remembering her. Tears roll down her cheek.

BEGINNING Sound of violin and Athena(17) has same stare as her past life.

MIDDLE stares at the moon.

END: tears pour down her cheeks as she plays.

EXT. THE HILL – DAWN

Sunrise on the back of ancient stone henge that slowly transforms into stone type of goddess looking rock.

BEGINNING: Sun rises on the base of a large stone

MIDDLE: slowly the light rises and transforms the stone into an ancient goddess. (intrigue, surprise)

END: Sound of the wind.

INT. CHAPEL – DAWN

Sister Anne(35)has a mystical experience in the chapel.

BEGINNING: Sister Anne(35) lights a flame at the prayer candles under a tall statue of Jesus, where a sword lays at his feet.

MIDDLE: sun rises through a stain glass window of Archangel Uriel. It hits his sword looking like flames.

END:She tip toes over to the window. Touches it. Grins with childish glee.

EXT.THE HILL – DAY

Lunea honors the Goddess stone with reverence and play.

BEGINNING: Sunrise looks like a flame rising out of the back of the stone goddess stone. (intrigue)

MIDDLE: Lunea raises her arms to the sunlight, bows reverently to the towering stone.

END: She grins and breaks out in laughter and a dance.(Celtic fiddle music) (surprise)

INT. THE PARISH KITCHEN – SAME DAY

Sister Anne serves breakfast to ailing Father Sinclair.

BEGINNING: Sister Anne carefully slices an apple into small pieces and humbly serves Father Sinclair

MIDDLE: As he says grace she steals a peeks at the horse grazing in the field. Smiles, takes big breath of joy, like a child with a bit of wildness in her. He sees her looking at the mare. She quickly returns to obedient prayer. Bites her lip and ever so slightly clenches her hands.

END: He mentions to Anne how much the Melody the dove reminds him of her. She pretends to coo and both laugh. He begins a spastic cough. Sister Anne freezes looks afraid. (uncertainty)

INT.LUNEA’S KITCHEN – SAME DAY

Lunea joyfully makes breakfast for Athena (12).

BEGINNING: Lunea makes breakfast for Athena (12). Waltzs over and kisses the top of her head. Grabs an apple from the table and quarters it for the squawking parrot named Eva.

MIDDLE:“Ah the forbidden apple my sweet Eve.” Giggles and smiles lovingly at ATHENA (12) who methodically gives the medicinal benefits she has learned about apples when in school in Ukraine.

END: Lunea smiles proudly announcing she is a brilliant child and will go far. But she tears up as she looks at her.

Athena looks away – the pain is too much.

EXT. FLEA MARKET – DAY

Sister Anne’s and Lunea meet for the first time.

BEGINNING: They catch each others glance.Lunea drops the bowl.(surprise)

MIDDLE Sister Anne smiles then quickly looks away.

END Tells her about a special flower that grows up the on the hill excitedly.

INT. SISTER ANNE’S BEDROOM/EXT.THE HILL – NIGHT

Anne dreams she is picking flowers at the stone goddess who quietly bends over and gives her a single flower that begins to glow.

BEGINNING dream is beautiful and calm.

MIDDLE Anne feels free the stone goddess who quietly bends over and gives her a single flower that begins to glow

END The dream frightens her and yet entices her to want to know more. She looks up the flowers healing qualities.

EXT. HILL MONTAGE – DAY

Scenes of the two women climb the hill from either side meet and get to know each other.

BEGINNING two women opposite sides of the hill

MIDDLE they have their private time of feeling free they start up a conversation.

END The OLD ONE hides behind the stone.(surprise , intrigue)

INT. LUNEA’S STORE – DAY

Lunea’s store is attacked and she can’t get help from the police.(conflict)(More interesting setting)

BEGINNING Lunea is organizing her store filled with New Age and Mother Earth politics and witchy knick knacks.(intrigue setting)

MIDDLE Teens come in and reck the place. Lunea fights back gets no help from the police. (conflict)

END Athena walks in and get triggered by the destruction reminding her of the Ukraine war.

INT.THE CHAPEL – SUNSET

The Council of the Universal Beings visit Sister Anne and shows her the goddess flame symbol. (surprise)

BEGINNING Sister Anne is having a conversation with Jesus

MIDDLE The Council of Universal Beings visit and show her the goddess flame.

END she faints.

INT.PARISH KITCHEN – DAY

Father Sinclair and Sister Anne are honest with each other and he ask her to promise to take over after he dies.

BEGINNING Father Sinclair shares his worry about what will happen with the church.

MIDDLE they both confess a secret. (surprise ,turning of events)

END He makes her promise to step into his shoes after he is gone. They hold hands. He announces he is scared.(turning of events)

EXT. LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Lunea gets drunk. Curses the teens and haters. Builds a stone circle – the goddess responds with a spiral of stars pouring over her. She falls to her knees and weeps in convulsions.

BEGINNING: Lunea gets drunk. Curses the teens and haters.

MIDDLE She builds a stone circle and the goddess responds with a spiral of stars pouring over her.(surprise)

END She falls to her knees and weeps in convulsions. (surprise)

EXT. FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair dies. He gets out of bed in the dark- opens the window – begins to fall- hobbles over to the cage and open the cage door-setting the bird free We hear a thunk on the ground. He has had an heart attack. In the moonlight we see he is smiling.

BEGINNING Father Sinclair gets out of bed in the dark- opens the window – begins to fall- hobbles over to the cage and open the cage door-setting the bird free (suspense)

MIDDLE He has had an heart attack.(turning point)

END In the moonlight we see he is smiling. (surprise)

INT. FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM – MORNING

Sister Anne discovers Father Sinclair dead.

KNOCKING ON DOOR- Sister Anne slowly opens the door- first sees his feet. Rushes over to him. Drops to her knees begins to weep looks up sees the bird cage door and window is open. The dove is sitting up in a tree. Her tears begin.

BEGINNING Sister Anne slowly opens the door- first sees his feet. (surprise)

MIDDLE Rushes over to him. Drops to her knees begins to weep looks up sees the bird cage door and window is open. The dove is sitting up in a tree.(intrigue)

END Her tears begin.

ACT 2 Turning Point:

INT.CHURCH /EXT.GRAVEYARD – DAY

Funeral – Sister Anne gives the funeral and is wearing father Sinclair’s preacher stole. She reads his chosen words.

The congregation looks up to her. She struggles to find courage to give her first words of her leadership. (

There are some grumblings around the men who do not want to take lead from a woman. (conflict)

BEGINNING Gives the funeral reading Father Sinclair’s words.

MIDDLE There are some grumblings around the men who do not want to take lead from a woman.(conflict)

END: She grabs the sword from the statue of Jesus and leads the way to the grave yard.

EXT.FIELD – DAY

Sister Anne watches the mare gallop across the field. She smiles with authentic joy as if she was riding her. (Over lay of her riding a horse as a child)Sighs and walks away.

BEGINNING Sister Anne day dreams watching the mare gallop across the field.

MIDDLE Has flashbacks of herself as a child.

END. Sighs and walks away.(internal Dilemma)

INT.ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair returns as a ghost. He wants Sister Anne to continue his work.

BEGINNING

MIDDLE

END

EXT.THE HILL – DAY

Sister Anne and Lunea meet on the hill and Lunea helps her.

BEGINNING

MIDDLE

END

INT.ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair’s ghost confesses he has failed teaching the heart of Jesus’ words and reveals the sword in the church belong to the pagans on the hill.

BEGINNING Sister Anne prays for help. She feels Jesus’ presence beside her and weeps.

MIDDLE When she opens her eyes she sees Lunea sitting by her side.(surprise)

END Lunea tells her it will be alright and hands her a fist size stone – intructs her to be like the stone.

INT.ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair’s ghost confesses to Sister Anne that he has failed teaching the heart of Jesus’ words. He reveals the sword in the church belongs to the pagans on the hill and wishes thy had torn it down a long time ago.

BEGINNING Father Sinclair’s ghost confesses to Sister Anne that he has failed teaching the heart of Jesus’ words.(surprise)

MIDDLE He reveals the sword in the church belongs to the pagans on the hill and wishes thy had torn it down a long time ago.(conflict)

END Anne walks out of the room angry.(conflict)

INT.CHURCH – NIGHT

Jesus speaks to her telling her to guide the people and the sword must be returned to the proper owners.

BEGINNING: Starts with Sister Anne talking to Jesus.

MIDDLE He appears. (surprise)

END: Instructs her to return the sword to the proper owners.(Surprise)

EXT.STREET CORNER -DAY

Athena feeds an old homeless native woman who unknown to her is One of the Council of Universal beings.

BEGINNING Athena feeds an old homeless native woman.

MIDDLE They have a long eye contact. Athena tears up.(intrigue)

END She leaves but tells her she will be back.

T. LUNEA’S HOME

Lunea tries to convince Athena to come swimming in the river but she refuses.

BEGINNING Lunea is enjoying her swim nude. Sees Anne standing at the shore.

MIDDLE Tries to convince her to come in. Anne resist saying it is not proper behavior for a nun.(internal dilemma,

END She changes her mind and rushes in. They play and giggle together.(surprise)(character change)

EXT.VILLAGE MONTAGE – DAY

Different scenes of Sister Anne and Lunea bonding and being playful and enjoying each others company.

EXT.HILL -DAY

Lunea breaks down shares the pain of her childhood and abusive relationships to Sister Anne who then holds her as she weeps.

BEGINNING Sister Anne ask Lunea about her past.(uncomfortable moment)

MIDDLE Lunea breaks down AND Sister Anne holds her as she weeps.(character change)

END Lunea looks up and says I never cry.

SISTER ANNE’S BEDROOM

Father Sinclair appears and is enraged about Sister Anne’s and Lunea’s friendship banging his fist on the table and says they are part of the evil.

BEGINNING Father Sinclair appears and is enraged about Sister Anne’s and Lunea’s friendship banging his fist on the table.(conflct)

MIDDLE Sister Anne struggles not to argue.(internal dilemma)

END She walks out when he accuses them of being part of the evil.(Character change)

EXT.LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Sister Anne seeks help from Lunea to banish the evil and find more about the history of the sword. Lunea asks to go to the church.

BEGINNING Sister Anne seeks help from Lunea to banish the evil.

MIDDLE Lunea wants to know more about the history of the sword.

END: Lunea asks to go to the church. (surprise , suspense)

INT. LUNEA’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Lunea has a visitation in a dream by a sacred guardian who tells her that she must help Sister Anne become a saint. (

BEGINNING Lunea is sleeping

MIDDLE Guardian visits and tells her that her mission is to help Anne fufill her destiny to become a saint in this life time. (mystery, intrigue)

END Lunea weeps.

EXT.THE VILLAGE -MONTAGE

Ongoing threats at Lunea’s store. She fights back. Calls talk show host and gathers a few like minded town people.

INT.SCHOOL – DAY

Bullying builds at school for Athena. (conflict)

INT.ATHENA’S BEDROOM- NIGHT

Lunea learns about what happened and they have a deep talk about the horrors of the war and how they must heal humanity. They hug.

BEGINNING Lunea walks in and sees Athena huddle in a corner.

MIDDLE They talk about the war and wars of humanity and there purpose. Lunea acknowledges Athena’s special gifts.

END the hug.

EXT.STREET SCENE – DAY

Athena begins to skip school and befriends the Old One (woman) in the street. She plays the violin with the Old One to help raise some money for her.

BEGINNING Athena turns around and does not enter the school in the morning (intrigue)

MIDDLE visits Old Woman and pulls out her violin to help raise some money for her

END The Old One nods approvingly as id she knew something.(intrigue )

EXT.THE STREET – NIGHT

Athena and Lunea bring the Old One home The Old One announces she knows the Ancient ways of magical healing.

BEGINNING Athena and Lunea bring the Old One home (surprise)

MIDDLE Athena and Lunea bring the Old One home The Old One announces she knows the Ancient ways of magical healing. (surprise)

END Lunea starts dancing the Old One joins in.

ACT 3:e)

INT.THE CHURCH – NIGHT

The Old One sends Lunea and Sister Anne through the Door of Remembering with the task to find in their past lives and the tools needed.

BEGINNING The tip toe into the church. (suspense)

MIDDLE The Old One sends Lunea and Sister Anne through the Door of Remembering with the task to find in their past lives and the tools needed. (suspense)

END woosh they step into the dark opening.(suspense)

INT. TIME TUNNEL MONTAGE

EXT.OLIVE TREE – DAY

The realize they both had witness Jesus’ crucifixion and wept together under an olive tree they each picked up an olive branch and carry it with them. (intrigue)

EXT. VILLAGE – DAY

They travel further and see the war images of burnt homes. Lunea begins to cry. Sister Anne astonished at Lunea’s heart felt response wraps her nun cloak around her and sings gently a hymn to her. They move on further into the time tunnel. (character change)

EXT.VILLAGE – NIGHT

They find a profound secret from the burning times when they both were burned as witches. They see Athena as a small child having witnessed their death. They both break down and weep as they stare at her. The Council of universal beings lead them forward.(suspense)(intrigue)

INT.TIME TUNNEL-NIGHT

They carry back to the present the flames of the fire that burnt them centuries ago, knowing the sacred healing heart of the witch’s goddesses were instilled in the flames. (intrigue)

INT.CHURCH – NIGHT

The Old One performs a powerful ceremony- “The fusing of the souls between Lunea and Anne to fight evil. (surprise)

BEGINNING they place their olive branches on the altar.

MIDDLE The Old One raises the sword.They each hold each a candle.

END they begin to glow like two flames.(surprise)

VILLAGE STREETS – DAY

The people in the town discover that their Nun and the Witch are secretly friends and begin to plan to attack Lunea and her daughter Athena.(suspense)

BEGINNING some men playing cards discuss the secret ongoings of Sister Anne and Lunea.(suspense)

MIDDLE begin to plan out an attack Lunea and her daughter Athena.(suspense)

END One guy pull out the ace spades and smirks.(suspense)

SCHOOL – DAY (MONTAGE OF DISCORD BUILDING)

Athena is rejected even more and bullied in school.

TOWNS PUB – NIGHT

The town’s hatred grows against all of them. (suspense)

INT.CHURCH – DAY

Sister Anne fights back against the hatred building forces She pauses silently and stares at each person. She speaks Jesus words hoping to unite the heart of humanity.

BEGINNING: Athena is bullied

MIDDLE: The town’s people plot (suspense)

END: Sister Anne stand strong with a silent stare and words of Jesus.(intrigue, character change)

INT.ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair, suggest to Sister Anne that Lunea and Athena join the church. (surprise)

BEGINNING:Father Sinclair appears.

MIDDLE:they discuss the evil that is rising in the village.

END:He suggest that Lunea and Athena join the church. (suspense ,surprise)

EXT.FIELD – NIGHT

Lunea helps Sister Anne fulfill her secret dream to ride a horse through the forest.

BEGINNING: Lunea takes Sister Anne to the mare next door. (intrigue)

MIDDLE: She convinces Sister Anne to ride her.

END:Sister Anne reclaims her freedom with powerful call to the wild.(character change)

INT. CHURCH – DAY

Athena and Lunea sit in the back of the church. People turn around and give her a doubtful somewhat rejecting glance. Sister Anne openly welcomes them to counter balance the congregations negativity.

BEGINNING Athena and Lunea sit in the back of the church.

MIDDLE People turn around and give her a doubtful somewhat rejecting glance. (suspense)

END Anne welcomes them.

INT.CHURCH-DAY

Sister Anne ask Lunea to read a prayer. The congregation rebel.

BEGINNING:Sister Anne announces Lunea to read a prayer for them. (suspense)

MIDDLE: In the end tells them it is from the Egyptian book of the dead.(surprise)

END:Horrified half the congregation walk out feeling hoodwinked.(suspense)

EXT. HILL – NIGHT

Lunea and Anne steal the church’s sword and take it to the stone goddess on the hill.

Sister Anne shyly confesses that she has fallen in love with Lunea.

Lunea stares at her longly – struggles inwardly but puts her finger gently over Sister Anne’s lips and tells her not this lifetime. She secretly knows that she is committed to help Anne become a saint. Lunea looks deeply sad.

They spend the night hand in hand – two souls gazing up at the heavens.

BEGINNING: Lunea and Anne steal the church’s sword and take it to the stone goddess on the hill.(suspense)

MIDDLE: Sister Anne shyly confesses that she has fallen in love with Lunea.Lunea stares at her longly – struggles inwardly but puts her finger gently over Sister Anne’s lips and tells her not this lifetime.(surprise)

END:They spend the night hand in hand – two souls gazing up at the heavens.(intrigue)

TOWN STREETS – DAY MONTAGE

Scene Arc: growing fear through out the montage of scenes)

The congregation finds out gossip grows.(suspense)

TOWN STREETS – NIGHT

Town people enraged seek Anne and Lunea out with a protest march- they burn down Lunea’s store.

Lunea and Athena hide among the street people.

BEGINNING: Town people enraged march through the streets with torches. (suspense)

MIDDLE:Town people burn down Lunea.(suspense)

END:Lunea and Athena hide among the street people.(suspense)

EXT. CHURCH STEPS – DAY

Athena, Lunea and Sister Anne are shot on the steps of the church. A miracle happens and Athena is saved.

BEGINNING Athena runs over to help the Old One up the stairs. A teen with a gun steps forward.(suspense)

MIDDLE: Sister Anne and Lunea run over to protect her and all are shot. It looks like sister Anne’s hand has healed Athena’s wound.(surprise)

END: The heavenly beings appear and carry Sister Anne and Lunea home.The town people weep understanding what has happened. (surprise)

ACT 4:

EXT. THE HILL -DAY

They carry one large casket up the hill. Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne are buried together on the hill. (change of character)

INT. THE TIME TUNNEL – (10 YEARS LATER)

The door of the Future opens slightly. Athena is at the pulpit as the new preacher of the church. (change of character,intrigue)

BEGINNING: Arrive at the door to the future opens.Athena has become the preacher with signs of Neo/pagan/Christian symbols (change of character, intrigue)

MIDDLE A glow begins on her heart space as an over lay of the goddess appears.

END: She plays the violin it fills the church.

EXT. THE HILL – NIGHT

The last image is a gravestone inscribed – ”Here rest Priestess Lunea and Saint Anne side by side. Heart by heart – Soul by soul for all eternity.”

Sounds of the Council Universal Beings.(cintrugue)

THE TIME TUNNEL – NIGHT

The door of time closes once again.

[Eclipse Neilson]

I am exchanging with Rene and will be away next week.

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Eclipse Neilson – Scene Requirements

THE NUN AND THE WITCH

1. VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

2. What I’ve Learned Doing This Assignment is to make sure the scenes move the story forward.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH/ MYSTICAL SCI-FI/ DRAMA

Act 1

EXT.UNIVERSE – NIGHT

Lunea and Anne are instructed by the Council of Universal Beings to return to earth to save the heart humanity.

Scene Arc: From eternal peace in each others arms to a carrying out a mission.

Essence: The heart of humanity my be saved.

Conflict: They don’t want to go.

Subtext: They represent love.

Hope/fear: They wont be able to save the heart of humanity.

INT. DARK TIME TUNNEL –

They travel to the beginning of their life times of love and loss to an Egyptian tomb.

Scene Arc: From eternal time to their first lifetime.

Essence: Time travelConflict:The unknown what happen

Subtext:Hope/fear: Life/ death choices

INT. EGYPTIAN TOMB – NIGHT

Their first life time they lovingly commit suicide trapped in their master’s tomb.(Father Sinclair

Scene Arc:The tomb door closing to ending th through time.

Essence: discovering their essence together and the pattern.

Conflict:must choose life or death

Subtext: They were lovers

Hope/fear: hope they escape.

INT TIME TUNNEL – NIGHT (MONTAGE)

Events flash on the walls on the time tunnel as they travel and pause at two of their life times till the come to the door of the present.

Scene Arc: From The 1920’s two female archeologist, to the horrors of Auschwitz with Athena a 6 year old watching to the present.

Essence: the deep connection of the three.

Conflict: Fight hatred in different life times.

Hope/fear: will it happen again?

INT.TIME TUNNEL – NIGHT

They step into the present holding hands -try not to let go of each other’s hand but fail.

Scene Arc: From the past to the present

Essence:The fear of the present.

Conflict:not wanting to let go of their bond.

Hope/fear:Will they never find each other again?

INT. ATHENA’S ROOM – NIGHT (MONTAGE)

Athena gazes out of the window at the moon as she plays the violin. Haunted sad look. Tears roll down her cheek.

Essence:How Athena heals and escapes her pain

Conflict:

Subtext:Music of the broken heart.

EXT. THE HILL – DAWN

Sunrise on the back of ancient stone henge that slowly transforms into stone type of goddess looking rock.

Essence:How the Goddess is in nature

Conflict:To be herself or not

Subtext: Magical power

INT. CHAPEL – DAWN

Sister Anne(35)has a mystical experience in the chapel at dawn.

Scene Arc:Sister Anne when alone finds her courage to reach out to the sacred.

Essence:Sister Anne’s healing magic Conflict:To be herself or not

Subtext: Magical power

EXT.THE HILL – DAY

Lunea honors the Goddess stone with reverence and play.

Scene Arc:from serious honor to playful celebration.

Essence: honoring the sacred as a witch.

Subtext: When alone she is free

INT. THE PARISH KITCHEN – SAME DAY

Sister Anne serves breakfast to Father Sinclair in bed.

Scene Arc:Goes from subservient to a feeling her dream to worry the future.

Essence:Annes secret dream of riding a horse

Subtext:breaking through a silent barrier of protocol

INT.LUNEA’S KITCHEN – SAME DAY

Lunea makes breakfast for Athena (12).

Scene Arc:from playfulness to deep empathy

Essence: Lunea’s love for Athena

Conflict:The horrors of war

Subtext: Lunea struggles with her vulnerability

Hope/fear: will they heal?

EXT. FLEA MARKET – DAY

Sister Anne’s and Lunea meet for the first time.

Scen Arc: from strangers to making contact once again.

INT. SISTER ANNE’S BEDROOM/EXT.THE HILL – NIGHT

Anne dreams she is picking flowers at the stone goddess who quietly bends over and gives her a single flower that begins to glow.

Scene Arc:from simple joy to fear

Essence: Their ancient bond

EXT. HILL MONTAGE – DAY

Scenes of the two women climb the hill from either side meet and get to know each other.

Scene Arc:from separation to connection

Essence:each seek a peaceful moment near the stone goddess.

INT. LUNEA’S STORE – DAY

Lunea’s store is attacked and she can’t get help from the police.

Scene Arc: from strength to powerlessness

Essence: religious discrimination

Conflict: Lunea fights off the teens

Hope/fear:there is no help

INT.THE CHAPEL – SUNSET

The Council of the Universal Beings visit Sister Anne and shows her the goddess flame symbol.

Scene Arc:mundane to the mystical awareness

Essence:The flame of the goddess

Conflict:to believe or not to believe

INT.PARISH KITCHEN – DAY

Father Sinclair and Sister Anne are honest with each other and he ask her to promise to take over after he dies.

Scene Arc: subservient and keeping secrets to honesty

Essence:speaking truth to each other.

Subtext:a healing in this life time.

Hope/fear: Sister Anne is afraid she will fail.

EXT. LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Lunea gets drunk builds a stone circle – the goddess responds.

Scene Arc:from drunken despair to empowerment

Essence:the plight of the Goddess

Hope/fear:she will give up.

EXT. FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair dies. He gets out of bed in the dark- opens the window – begins to fall- hobbles over to the cage and open the cage door-setting the bird free (Subtext Sister Anne’s freedom)We hear a thunk on the ground. He has had an heart attack. In the moonlight we see he is smiling.(arc from life to death)

Scene Arc:from life to death

Essence:freedom

Subtext:the bird set free from the cage-freedom

Hope/fear:what will happen now to the church?

INT. FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM – MORNING

Sister Anne discovers Father Sinclair dead.

KNOCKING ON DOOR- Sister Anne slowly opens the door- first sees his feet. Rushes over to him. Drops to her knees begins to weep looks up sees the bird cage door and window is open. The dove is sitting up in a tree. Her tears begin.

Scene Arc: from fear to acceptance

Essence: Death

Conflict: Needing to take on her power and fear

Subtext:

Hope/fear: Will Sister Anne handle the huge challenge?

ACT 2 Turning Point:

INT.CHURCH /EXT.GRAVEYARD – DAY

Funeral – Sister Anne gives the funeral and is wearing father Sinclair’s preacher stole. She reads his chosen words.

The congregation looks up to her. She struggles to find courage to give her first words of her leadership.

She quotes part of Jesus words of Matthew 11:28-30

“Come to me, all you who are weary and burdened, and I will give you rest.

There are some grumblings around the men who do not want to take lead from a woman.

Anne sees them and attempts to stand in her power but falls back into her humble pose.

Takes a deep breath.

Grabs the sword from the statue of Jesus.

Looks down at it. Then quietly stares back at the men.

Nods ceremoniously and walks by them holding the sword in front of her as she follows the casket to the small grave yard on the side of the church.

Scene Arc: fear and apprehension to taking on one’s power

Essence: coming into her power as the preacher.

Conflict:the men who don’t think a woman should take his place.

Subtext:She is destined to lead.

Hope/fear: afraid she will fail or be attacked.

EXT.FIELD – DAY

Sister Anne watches the mare gallop across the field. She smiles with authentic joy as if she was riding her. (Over lay of her riding a horse as a child)

Scene Arc: calm observance to coming into herself and dreams

Essence:the dreamer

Conflict:not believing she can have her wish.

Subtext:freedom in the ride.

Hope/fear:

INT.ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair returns as a ghost. He wants Sister Anne to continue his work.

Scene Arc:Sister Anne’s calm to fear

Essence: haunting control

Conflict:She wants to discover her own teachings of Jesus.

Subtext:

Hope/fear:Anne is afraid he will continue to haunt her.

EXT.THE HILL – DAY

Sister Anne and Lunea meet on the hill and Lunea helps her.

Scene Arc: despair to childish joy

Essence:bonding

Conflict:The villagers

Subtext:

Hope/fear:

INT.ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair’s ghost confesses he has failed teaching the heart of Jesus’ words and reveals the sword in the church belong to the pagans on the hill.

Scene Arc: the mundane to discovering ancient mystery

Essence:The Mystical

Conflict: The congregation will rage if she shares the truth.

Subtext:

Hope/fear:what the village will rage if they find out

INT.CHURCH – NIGHT

Jesus speaks to her telling her to guide the people and the sword must be returned to the proper owners.

Scene Arc: seeker to finding clues to awe.

Essence: truth

Conflict:

Subtext:

Hope/fear:

INT. LUNEA’S HOME

Lunea tries to convince Athena to come swimming in the river but she refuses.

Scene Arc:

Essence: Athena doesn’t know how to play

Conflict:

Subtext:

Hope/fear:being caught

EXT.STREET CORNER -DAY

Athena feeds an old homeless native woman who unknown to her is One of the Council of Universal beings.

Scene Arc:a child like observance to compassionate helper. Essence:Athena’s love and healing gifts.

Conflict:poverty

Subtext:Athena identifies with the Old One

Hope/fear:no one will help the old one.

EXT.THE RIVER POOL – DAY

Lunea is swimming naked in the water invites Sister Anne in who finally accepts the offer.

Scene Arc: restrictive, stick with the rules behavior to joy

Essence:freedom

Conflict:rule and need to set one free

Subtext:

Hope/fear:fear some one will see them.

EXT.VILLAGE MONTAGE – DAY

Different scenes of Sister Anne and Lunea bonding and being playful and enjoying each others company.

Scene Arc:

Essence: Bonding

Conflict:

Subtext:they are falling in love.

Hope/fear: it is too dangerous.

EXT.HILL -DAY

Lunea breaks down shares the pain of her childhood and abusive relationships to Sister Anne.

Scene Arc: from the strong one to trusting no one to becoming vulnerable

Essence: vulnerability

Conflict:

Subtext:Hope/fear:

SISTER ANNE’S BEDROOM

Father Sinclair appears and is enraged about Sister Anne’s and Lunea’s friendship banging his fist on the table and says they are part of the evil.

Scene Arc: from joy to fear

Essence: sexual discrimination

Conflict: Father Sinclair’s anger

Subtext:

Hope/fear

EXT.LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Sister Anne seeks help from Lunea to banish the evil and find more about the history of the sword. Lunea asks to go to the church.

Lunea ask her to take her to the church and let her see the sword.

Scene Arc: Anne seeking help, to afraid, to becoming engaged in the solution.

Essence:

Conflict:

Subtext:

Hope/fear:

INT. LUNEA’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Lunea has a visitation in a dream by a sacred guardian who tells her that she must help Sister Anne become a saint.

Scene Arc:from calm and contentment to hard challenges. Essence:soul commitment

Conflict:

Subtext: Lunea knows intuitivily knows it is going to be tragic.

Hope/fear: afraid it will set up the same lifetime patterns

EXT.THE VILLAGE -MONTAGE

Ongoing threats at Lunea’s store. She fights back. Calls talk show host and gathers a few like minded town people.

Scene Arc:From feeling that she does not belong to find a few who accept her.

Essence:religious discrimination

Conflict:fight back

Subtext:

Hope/fear:

INT.SCHOOL – DAY

Bullying builds at school for Athena.

Scene Arc: growing fear

Essence:discrimination

Conflict:the bullies

Subtext:

Hope/fear:

INT.ATHENA’S BEDROOM- NIGHT

Lunea learns about what happened and they have a deep talk about the horrors of the war and how they must heal humanity. They hug.

Scene Arc: arc of pain,loss to belonging and feeling loved.

Essence:mission

Conflict:the cruel world

Subtext:the are both healers

Hope/fear:they will fail.

EXT.STREET SCENE – DAY

Athena begins to skip school and befriends the Old One (woman) in the street. She plays the violin with the Old One to help raise some money for her.

Scene Arc: from despair to purpose and creative healing.

Essence: bonding and following ones destiny.

Conflict:

Subtext: Athena is a healer.

Hope/fear:

EXT.THE STREET – NIGHT

Athena and Lunea bring the Old One home The Old One announces she knows the Ancient ways of magical healing.

Scene Arc: homeless not belonging to finding a home

Essence:finding the helper.

Conflict:poverty

Subtext:The Old One is a healer and Athena knew it.

Hope/fear:

ACT 3:

INT.THE CHURCH – NIGHT

The Old One sends Lunea and Sister Anne through the Door of Remembering with the task to find in their past lives and the tools needed.

Scene Arc:fear and resistance to moving forward

Essence:time travel

Conflict:

Subtext:

Hope/fear:

INT. TIME TUNNEL MONTAGE

The realize they both witness Jesus’ crucifixion and wept together under an olive tree they each picked up an olive branch and carry it with them.

They travel further and see the war images of burnt homes. Lunea begins to cry. Sister Anne astonished at Lunea’s heart felt response wraps her nun cloak around her and sings gently a hymn to her. PROFOUND GRIEF/ EMPATHY

They move on further into the time tunnel.

They find a profound secret from the burning times when they both were burned as witches. They see Athena as a small child having witnessed their death. They both break down and weep as they stare at her. SORROW / EMPATHY

(Arc from seeking knowledge to finding knowledge)

The Council of universal beings lead them forward.

They carry back to the present the flames of the fire that burnt them centuries ago, knowing the sacred healing heart of the witch’s goddesses were instilled in the flames.

Scene Arc: seeking for answers to returning with knowledge

Essence:time travel

INT.THE CHURCH – NIGHT

They place the flame and the olive branches at the foot of Jesus where the sword lays. A miraculous image of the flaming sword appears.

Scene Arc: courage and hidden mystery revealed

Essence:miracles and connections

EXT.LUNEA’S HOME-NIGHT

The Old One performs a powerful ceremony- “The fusing of the souls between Lunea and Anne to fight evil.

Scene Arc:from being separated to eternal connection and commitment

Essence: destiny

VILLAGE STREETS – DAY

The people in the town discover that their Nun and the Witch are secretly friends and begin to plan to attack Lunea and her daughter Athena.

(Arc of discovery to rage montage)

MONTAGE:

SCHOOL – DAY

Athena is rejected even more and bullied in school.

TOWNS PUB – NIGHT

The town’s hatred grows against all of them.

Scene Arc: discovery to rage (montage)

Essence: Discrimination

Conflict:the towns people attack Lunea and Athena

Subtext:the wound in the heart of humanity

Hope/fear:the will be hurt.

INT. CHURCH – DAY

The brutal discrimination and hatred building forces Anne to stand in her power. She pauses silently and stares at each person. She speaks Jesus words and her heartfelt truth and carry out the mission Father Sinclair was never able to do. To unite the heart of humanity.

Scene Arc:powerlessness to taking on power

Essence:healing power returns

Conflict:the hatred in the people.

Hope/fear:they will be harmed.

INT.ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair, Sister Anne and Lunea join forces. He instructs Lunea to join the church.

Scene Arc:acceptance, forgiveness and change

Essence:healing begins

Conflict:the congregation.

EXT.FIELD – NIGHT

Lunea helps Sister Anne rides the horse free through the field and forest. She cries out wildly , forcefully and joyfully a free woman -fulfills her dream.

Scene Arc: breaking free and living a dream with joy

Essence: healing into freedom

Hope/fear:She will get causght

INT. CHURCH – NEXT DAY

Athena and Lunea sit in the back of the church. People turn around and give her a doubtful somewhat rejecting glance. Sister Anne openly welcomes them to counter balance the congregations negativity.

Scene Arc: from hope to despair to a small step into power

Essence: Sister Anne’s courage

Conflict:The congregations rejection

Hope/fear:this could create more hatred

INT.PARISH KITCHEN- NIGHT

Sister Anne and Father Sinclair’s ask Lunea to share an ancient prayer to the congregation in a Sunday sermon.

Scene Arc:having no answers to finding possible answers

Essence:new possibilities

Conflict: differences of sacred beliefs

INT.CHURCH-DAY

Lunea reads a prayer from the book of the dead but doesn’t tell them where it comes from till the end.Half The congregation walk out feeling hoodwinked.

Scene arc:Arc of from hope to a sense of utter failure

Subtext: a prayer Lunea and Sister Anne spoke to each other in the Egyptian tomb from their first lifetime.

Conflict: congragation’s response

Hope/fear: it will get worse

EXT. HILL – NIGHT

Lunea and Anne that night steal the church’s smaller crucifix and sword and take them to the stone goddess on the hill. statue that strangely looks more and morel like the open arms of Mother Mary after they place the sword in her arms and a small gold crucifix at her heart.

Sister Anne shyly confesses that she has fallen in love with Lunea.

Lunea stares at her longly -struggles inwardly but puts her finger gently over Sister Anne’s lips and tells her not this lifetime. She secretly knows that she is committed to help Anne become a saint. Lunea looks deeply sad.

They spend the night hand in hand – two souls gazing up at the heavens.

Scene Arc: Arc of overcoming fear and revealing truths

Essence: returning all to its origin

Conflict:stole the sword.

Subtext:Hope/fear

TOWN STREETS – DAY MONTAGE

Scene Arc: growing fear through out the montage of scenes)

The congregation finds out gossip grows.

TOWN STREETS – NIGHT

Town people enraged seek Anne and Lunea out with a protest march- they burn down Lunea’s store. March through the streets with torches.

Lunea and Athena hide among the street people.

EXT. CHURCH STEPS – DAY

Athena, Lunea and Sister Anne are shot on the steps of the church. A miracle happens and Athena is saved. The spirits of the heavens appear at that moment as Star Beings, Angels, and cloaked Ancients from the Universal Council of Beings take Lunea and Sister Anne spirts away. The Goddess light appears on Athena’s heart. The town people weep understanding what has happened.

Scene:Arc of hope to fear, tragedy, horror to beauty and the beginning of the healing of the heart of humanity.

ACT 4:

EXT. THE HILL -DAY

They carry one large casket up the hill. Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne are buried together on the hill.

Scene Arc: completion to success)

INT. THE TIME TUNNEL – (10 YEARS LATER)

Time tunnel appears again. We move forward to the door of the Future. It opens slightly and we see an image of Athena at the pulpit as the new preacher of the church. She plays the violin.

She wears the sign of the Neo-Pagan moon and Christian sun cross on either side of her preacher’s stole.

A glow begins on her heart space and an over lay of the goddess appears. Athena has become the Goddess – returned to Earth holding the sacred flame in her heart. HOPE JOY

Congregation listens adoringly. Violin fills the church. LOVE

Scene Arc:from changes to hope to healing.

EXT. THE HILL – NIGHT

The last image is a gravestone inscribed – ”Here rest Priestess Lunea and Saint Anne side by side. Heart by heart – Soul by soul for all eternity.”

Sounds of the Council Universal Beings

THE TIME TUNNEL – NIGHT

The door of time closes once again.

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Eclipse Neilson Intriguing Moments

1. VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

2. What I’ve Learned Doing This Assignment is intrigue and mystery comes to me a bit naturally. And I know more will be revealed as I write.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH

ACT 1

Intrigue: The Council of the Universe has sent two souls back to earth who have had a history of tragic lifetimes together. The quest is can they break that pattern this lifetime?

Mystery / intrigue the time tunnel.

Secret: The Old One is a secret guide and will set off a series of circumstances for Sister anne and Lunea to accomplish their life mission.

Covert agenda: The Old One secretly watches from afar as the two begin to bond in this life time.

Hidden identity: The Old One is an ancient Star Being

Conspiracy:

Scheme: Lunea and Sister Anne try to change the heart and minds of the villagers and congregation.

Superior position: The Old One is one of the Council of Universal beings but sister Anne and Lunea do not know it.

Cover up: Sister Anne hides her friendship with Lunea

Mystery: Father Sinclair begins to talk to Anne about her leadership and later haunts her to mold her into becoming the church preacher under his ghostly command.

Mystery: The spirit of Jesus stands next to Lunea the Witch more than once encouraging Sister Anne to her befriend her.

Mystery: The sign of goddess flame on the stained glass window on Mary while Sister Anne is praying.

ACT 2

Intrigue: Sister Anne grabs the sword from the Jesus statue’s feet and raises it as a sign of her newborn power to the congregation

The church glass windows are part of the puzzle being revealed.

Secret:

Covert agenda: Lunea wants to free Sister Anne from her shame and submissive behavior.

Hidden identity: Athena begins to reveal her purpose in this life time and it is confirmed by Lunea .

Conspiracy:

Scheme:

Superior position: The audience knows that Athena has traveled many lifetimes with these two and has suffered great loss in past lifetimes. Will this happen again?

Cover up: Lunea and Sister Anne begin to secretly work together in the church and perform an ancient ceremony.

ACT 3:

Intrigue: The church glass windows are part of the puzzle being revealed.

Secret: Sister Anne is falling in love with Lunea. But Lunea struggles with her feelings knowing she must carry out her mission.

Covert agenda: Lunea and the Old One must continue to help free Sister Anne t become a leader that makes a difference

Hidden identity: Conspiracy: The Old One is one of the counsel of universal beings. Athena is the goddess embodied by a young girl and orphan of war.

Scheme: To return the goddess healing power to humanity

ACT 4

The mission is accomplished, and the congregation realizes what their discrimination has done after the tragedy occurs.

(The reveal) is that Athena is the goddess returned we see the symbol in the future as she has become the church preacher.

(The Mystery) is solved with the flames and sword returned to the proper place. And Sister Anne and Lunea’s flame unite once again- .

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Eclipse Neilson – Emotional Moments

.VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

2. What I’ve Learned Doing This Assignment is that the places of some of the scenes will move around to be more in the flow and build-up of emotions

THE NUN AND TH WITCH

SCI-FI/ MYSTICAL DRAMA

ACT 1

FEAR/ LOVE & LOST/ SORROW /MYSTERY

Sister Anne and Lunea experience in flashes how each of their past lives ended, as they travel through the time tunnel. Deep emotional trauma.

FEAR/ LOVE & LOST /COURAGE

They arrive in the present where the sound of bombs and war, protest and hatred has taken over humanity. They take one last loving look and painfully let go as the step into their new lives.

HOPE

The two meet again in a new life and Athena is Lunea’s niece she has adopted from Ukraine.

FEAR ANGER DESPAIR, DISTRESS

Lunea’s New Age store is damaged by some thugs who threaten to return . It triggers Athena’s memories of her fear and loss while in Ukraine during the war and wants to give up.

SADNESS /HOPE / FEAR

Father Sinclair dies freeing the cage bird just before he collapses. Sister Anne discovers him. The unknown is whether she will be able to keep her promise to him and save the church as the new leader.

ACT 2

EMOTIONAL DILEMMA

Father haunts Sister Anne wanting her to lead with the same control he did but she has grown close to. Lunea and their love is growing.

JOY/ FREEDOM & LOVE

Lunea convinces Sister Anne to let go and be free spirit again and jump into the river with her. After an internal struggle she rushes into the river with her clothes on to join Lunea who is naked.

SORROW/ FEAR

Lunea has a foretelling dream where she realizes there once again be a great loss between the two of them and that Athena her niece will grieve.

FEAR/DISTRESS/ BONDING

Athena is bullied in school and she runs away to the streets.

HOPE

Athena develops a loving relationship with the homeless Old One and brings her home. Both Lunea and Athena discover she is a tribal Wise woman

HOPE

Anne stand in her power against the brutal discrimination and begins to unite the heart of humanity.

LOVING JOY

Father Sinclair and Sister Anne have a breakthrough moment where he seeks redemption and she blesses him.

JOY FREEDOM

Sister Anne finally fulfills her inner spirit wish and rides the mare through the forest with great freedom.

ACT 3:

FEAR/ DISTRESS

The town reacts to Lunea;s and Sister Anne’s friendship and threatens them.

LOVE / SADNESS/ SACRIFICE

Sister Anne and Lunea spend the night under the heavens holding each other. Sister Anne confesses she has fallen in love with Lunea, but Lunea tearfully tells her not In this lifetime can they come together as lovers because there are bigger task at hand.

ACT 4

GRIEF / SACRIFICE

Sister Anne and Lunea are killed on the steps of the church.

HOPE

The people have an awakening after witnessing a miracle with Athena and the Council of Universal Beings return Sister Anne and Lunea to the heavens.

HOPE/ SUCESS WINNING

In the future we see Athena is the new preacher and she is the goddess returned.

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THE NUN AND THE WITCH

1. VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

2. What I’ve Learned Doing This Assignment

What I learned from doing this assignment is Athena’s character and actions is woven tightly together with the other two on this journey. I will be developing more Lunea’s internal struggle as I write.But I am getting more excited abut writing this script now.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH/ MYSTICAL SCI-FI/ DRAMA

Act 1

Opening:

UNIVERSE – NIGHT

In timeless space two female figures as silhouettes on a starry hill. One (Anne) has her head on the shoulder of the other.

VARIED VOICES and strange BEEPS STAR FLASHES WHISPERS as the Council of Universal Beings appear.

SET UP (Sets up the sound of the healing path through out the script.)

DARK TIME TUNNEL

The two souls (SISTER ANNE 35 and LUNA THUNDER 45) wisp by as they travel through the dark time tunnel.

Flashes of their lives begin to appear-first in Egypt.

The shadowy forms watch their first lifetime together. Anne peers over the shoulder of Lunea.

EGYPTIAN TOMB – NIGHT

Two Egyptian slave women each hold an oil lamp.

SET UP(Sacred Flame quest ) They place their flame side by side. Each pick up a small vessel of serpentine liquid. They stare at each other fondly. Flickers of their flames cast shadows on their face. They pause and drink the poison staring into each others eyes.

SET UP(Romeo Juliet setup reveled in 3rd)

SISTER ANNE lays her head on LUNA THUNDER’S shoulder and they hold each other – they close their eyes. A gentle smile appears on their faces. The flames flickers on a sword on the coffin. SILENCE (revel in Act 2 ) SETS UP a Romeo /Juliet type theme.

Their shadowy spirits quickly move forward. WOOSH

TIME TUNNEL: MONTAGE – NIGHT

Events through flashes on the walls on the time tunnel.

The 1920’s two female archeologist discover grave of two women skeletons in same position. They look at each other – and quickly cover up the grave knowing it is them.

Lunea reaches out and squeezes the hand of Anne and smirks. Anne giggles like a child. SETS UP (love story between them)

Fast forward Auschwitz two women stare at each other longingly as one (Lunea )is taken away holding the hand of a little girl( Athena) who stare longly at out at the world.

SETS UP (Act 4 with Athena giving the same look after the tragic murder of Sister Anne and Lunea)

A Nazi ( Father Sinclair)soldier looks at Anne and then leads the two away.

Anne collapses to the ground and weeps. SET UP (in Act 2/3 for Father Sinclair seeking redemption)

Time tunnel moves faster. Darker and darker –

The shadowy figures of Anne and Lunea wait in front of large metal door with the blood painted words THE REMEMBERING. It CREAKS open.

A sound of a violin plays. (Athena 12 yr) set up for Athena’s playing at church. Suddenly The violin stops.

SET UP for Athena’s flashback of Ukraine war Act 2 and the Violin weaves through the story.

They step through. Lunea leading the way.

The door SLAMS close behind them.

They turn around and see the other side of the door the words -THE FORGETTING.

SET UP(the never forget quote from the Holocaust)

They step into the present holding hands. Images of sky scrapper – sound of news reporter war in Ukraine BOMBS-political speeches. (2022)

They let go of each other’s hand.

SET UP for act 2 when Sister Anne realizes she is falling in love with Lunea. They vanish.

THE HILL -DAWN

Birds greeting the dawn – Sunrise on the back of ancient stone henge type of goddess looking rock.

SET UP (The theme of return of the Goddess.) The tall hill looks over a village.

CHAPEL – DAWN

The chapel is slightly run down. Silence.

Sister Anne(35) lights a flame at the prayer candles under a tall statue of Jesus, where a sword lays at his feet. She humbly bows. Tears fill her eyes filled with emotion. Set up of flame thread through out the script.

SET UP for time travel Lunea and Sister Anne take in Act 3

Turns to see if anyone is looking at her. She is alone. Sighs in relief and looks at a stain glass window of Archangel Uriel the sunlight hits the sword and makes it look for a moment like a flaming sword.

SET UP She gasp like a young child with excited joy revealing there is child like spirit that still wants to be free)

Athena (12) with a haunted look sits in a chair and looks out of her window and plays the violin to the dawn.

THE HILL-DAY

Sunrise looks like a flame rising out of the back of the stone goddess Monolith.

SET UP (The burning times theme)

Lunea with arms raised powerful to the sunlight, bows reverently with prayer hands and slowly looks up at the towering stone.

She grins and begins to dance freely in front of the stone. (Celtic fiddle)

SET UP The contrast of Lunea’s free spirit and Sister Anne’s oppressed inner child spirit)

THE PARISH KITCHEN – SAME DAY

Sister Anne makes lovingly breakfast for father Sinclair. REVEAL Father Sinclair is the Nazi in a past life.Chops apple carefully into small pieces and places on a dish serves it with a boiled egg and toast.

Walks over – half genuflects to him and serves tray. He nods approvingly says grace. She bows her head.

A horses neigh in the window.

She opens her eyes as she prays. Like a kid sneaking a peak, she sees the next door neighbors horse grazing in the field. Smiles, takes big breath of joy, like a child with a bit of wildness in her. He sees her looking at the mare. She quickly returns to obedient prayer- tightens her lip and ever so slightly clenches her hands.

SETS UP The oppressed / freedom struggle theme for Sister Anne

Father Sinclair thanks her and smiles as he bites a piece of apple and stares at the turtle dove name MELODY, who quietly coos. He mentions to Anne how much the dove reminds him of her. She smile appreciatively as she gazes at Melody.

She pretends to coos and both laugh.

LUNEA’S KITCHEN – SAME DAY

Lunea stands tall and proud. Makes breakfast for Athena (12). Waltzs over and kisses the top of her head. Grabs an apple from the table and quarters it.

Grins like a queen as she hands a piece to a small parrot (Eva) who sits on top of her cage and squawks.

SETS UP Theme of contrast of Bible story verses Ancient GoddessMyth

Lunea mentions something like – “Ah the forbidden apple my sweet Eve.”Giggles.

ATHENA (12) observes gives the medicinal benefits she has learned about apples when in school in Ukraine. Lunea smiles proudly announcing she is a brilliant child and will go far.

FLEA MARKET – DAY

Crowded market. Sister Anne’s flower print card table is diagonally across from Lunea’s stand filled with crystals wands and other witchy type tools, along with political brochures for women’s right- gay right – black life matters animal rights and more.

They catch glances a few times. Lunea smiles.

Sister Anne smiles then quickly looks away. Lunea nods in a questioning manor and walks over. She admires Sister Anne’s beautiful flower prints. She is selling to raise money for the church. They start up a conversation. Sister Anne looks up to Lunea’s tall stature.

Lunea buys a few cards for her store gives her the extra change kissing the bills with a spell prayer. Tells her about a special flower that grows up the on the hill excitedly.

SISTER ANNE’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Anne has a dream she is picking flowers on the hill and the stone goddess monolith quietly bends over and gives her a single flower that begins to glow. Anne gazes up at the tall stone first adoringly then suddenly shudders.

SET UP The internal struggle for Sister Anne’

Anne awakes afraid and yet curious.

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM -DAY

Anne lets Father Sinclair know she is going to spend the afternoon hiking and then adds “with Jesus” up the hill to see the Ancient stone. He frowns and mumbles something about it should have been pulled down years ago. Sister Anne bows her head obediently.

SETS UP The history of the Goddess story of being destroyed.

HILL MONTAGE – DAY

Scenes of the two women climb the hill from either side.

Sister Anne while in nature shows her strength and desire to be free and young.

Takes a deep breath clenches her hands to her chest with wonderment and grins.

Sister Anne arrives after Lunea.

Both look surprised.

They start up a longer conversation.

Cloaked OLD ONE (Native American shaman woman) hides hunched over behind big Mother stone and smiles as she listens to them talk. They do not know she is there.

SETS UP The universal Beings come to help save earth.

Lunea’s store – day

Front window covered with many different traditions posters and flags – native – Goddess – Buhdah ….

Lunea is organizing her shop. Takes a deep breath with pride. Sprinkles Some water in a bottle with a $ sign over herself. Burst out in laughter.

Some teens come into the store and stare at her. She stands tall and stare back at them with a daring look.

They start messing things up. Turn over a table – You evil witch they yell out and dart out the door laughing.

She grabs a Kali stature and raises as she curses at them.

She calls the police yelling. Listens – changes her tone to a pretend soft spoken pace. Shakes her head looks like she is about to burst into tears. Gives up after a short conversation. Slams the phone down. Stares out the door.

SET UP The discrimination theme

Athena walks in and sees the damage and freezes in place as if she has PTSD. She has flashbacks of Ukraine and the war she has fled. She begins to weep with no sound and shakes. Lunea runs over and holds protectively.

SETS UP The weaving of time theme.

THE CHAPEL – SUNSET

Sister Anne is sweeping, then sits down in a pew, gazes at the stature of Jesus with a silver sword at his feet. She starts up a conversation / quote.(must find quote)

The sun sets in the stain window across from Uriel on Mary – it glows in her heart center.

Sister Anne makes a comment about the heart of the mother. She hears the voices and beeps of the Council of the Universe whispering the sign of goddess flame.

PARISH KITCHEN – DAY

Sister Anne and Father Sinclair have dinner across from each other. Knowing he is ill, he instructs her with a parental tone that she must continue the church after he dies and not tell the head church because they will sell the building to the best buyer.

He shares how afraid he is to have his church goers be abandoned and discusses some ideas. A haggard look takes over his expression as he hides his pain.

SETS UP: the turning point

Sister Anne consoles him and says she will do so. They tell each other their big secrets – He has not had any help from the big church for years and she tells him she was a runaway nun but never stopped being a nun.

They hold each other’s hand as if there is a forgiving and a sacred commitment.

Sister Anne struggles to look at him straight in the eye but finally succeeds and nods yes with a gentle smile.

SETS UP The core image of healing of the great divide.

LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Lunea sits outside looks up at the moon and takes gulps like a man her mug of ale. She is slightly drunk. A frown and tears streams down her cheeks as she builds a stone circle. Carries one large stone as she grunts to the center.

Stands in the center and raises her arms in the sign of female power.

SETS UP The return of the Goddess theme

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

He gets out of bed in the dark- opens the window – begins to fall- hobbles over to the cage and open the cage door- a dark shadow and sound of wings as the bird flies out the window. SETS UP Sister Anne’s freedom

We hear a thunk on the ground. He has had an heart attack. In the moonlight we see he is smiling.

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM – MORNING

KNOCKING ON DOOR- Sister Anne slowly opens the door- first sees his feet. Rushes over to him. Drops t her knees begins to weep looks up sees the bird cage door and window is open. The dove is sitting up in a tree. Her tears begin.

She sees a notebook on the bedside table with a letter for her. She reads it. He has given her step by step instructions on how to tell the parish that she will lead. REVEAL he was in this lifetime to help her and heal their relationship.

ACT 2

Turning Point:

CHURCH GRAVEYARD – DAY

Funeral – Sister Anne gives the funeral and is wearing father Sinclair’s preacher stole. She reads his chosen words.

The congregation looks up to her. She struggles to find courage to give her first words of her leadership.

She quotes part of Jesus words of Matthew 11:28-30

“Come to me, all you who are weary and burdened, and I will give you rest. Take my yoke upon you and learn from me, for I am gentle and humble in heart, and you will find rest for your souls.”

There are some grumblings around the men who do not want to take lead from a woman.

Anne sees them and attempts to stand in her power but falls back into her humble pose.

Takes a deep breath.

Grabs the sword from the statue of Jesus.

Looks down at it. Then quietly stares back at the men.

Nods ceremoniously and walks by them holding the sword in front of her as she follows the casket to the small grave yard on the side of the church.

SETS UP Sister Anne’s steps into her female power.

FIELD – DAY

Sister Anne watches the mare gallop across the field. She smiles with authentic joy as if she was riding her. (over lay of her riding)

ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair returns as a ghost.

He wants her to continue his work. She is afraid and wraps herself in the blanket.

THE HILL – DAY

Sister Anne sits looking out over the town. Prays for help. She feels Jesus’ presence and weeps.

When she looks up from her tears she see Lunea is sitting by her side. They sit side silently.

Lunea tells her it will be alright and hands her a fist size stone from the ground. Telling her to be like the stones.

ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father haunts her warning her that evil forces are taking over the town. She ask why- he hangs his head ashamed- and talks about having forgotten the true teachings of Jesus.

SETS UP The theme of healing the past and never forget

He leads her into the church and shows her the sword laid at Jesus feet- tells her what legend goes along with the sword. It belonged to early pagan settlers. He suggest the answers can be found with the sword. He disappears.

CHURCH – NIGHT

She kneels at Jesus’ feet and prays.

She hears Jesus voice – telling her to guide the people to put down their weapons and that this is the sword of light not of death and must be returned to the proper owners.

She listens and then looks over at the stain glass window with a knight on a horse.Makes The connection.

SETS UP The time weaver theme.

THE RIVER POOL – DAY

Lunea is swimming naked in the water.

Sister Anne appears and stands silently and longly . Lunea invites her to join her.

Sister Anne refuses because she is a nun. But ultimately jumps into the water playfully with her clothes on.

Flickers of light blends with their giggles and laughter.

SETS UP The big step into Sister Anne’s healing.

VILLAGE MONTAGE – DAY

Different scenes of Sister Anne and Lunea bonding and being playful and enjoying each others company.

SISTER ANNE’S BEDROOM

Father Sinclair appears and is enraged about their friendship banging his fist on the table.

SETS UP The true core problem of discrimination

LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Sister Anne seeks help from Lunea knowing she will understand what to do with the hauntings and help banish the evil and might know the history of the sword.

Lunea ask her to take her to the church and let her see the sword.

THE CHAPEL – NIGHT

They both tip toe in.

Lunea reaches out and touches the sword. Sister Anne horrified tries to stop her. But Lunea stands strong and holds her back.

Lunea listen to the mumbles and voices ghostly voices rising in the church. She tell Sister Anne the church had belonged to the pagans who had travel to this coast and joined forces with the native people.

She stares silently at Sister Anne. Then instructs her as if she was the goddess herself that they must join heart flames to fight what is emerging in the town.

Lunea marches over to the alter and lights two candles and walks back.

They enact an ancient ceremony similar as in the Egyptian tomb.

SETS UP the divine universe plan.

LUNEA’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Lunea has a visitation in a dream by a Council of the Beings guardian that tells her that she must help Sister Anne become a saint. But they do not say how.

The Council of the Universal Beings responds and sends an Ancient female guardian – The OLD ONE to guide them as they set out to fight the hatred, bigotry, and falsehoods that is taking over.

THE VILLAGE -MONTAGE

Ongoing threats at Lunea’s store. She fights back with headlines of what is happening in the world rooted in judgement and hatred. Calls talk show host and gathers a few like minded town people.

SCHOOL – DAY

Bullying builds at school for Athena .

ATHENA’S BEDROOM

Athena sadly plays the violin as a healing.

Lunea walks in listens and they have a deep talk about the horrors of the war and how they must heal humanity.

Athena begins a new song on the violin. Lunea watches her with a teary look of love and gentleness.

SET UP The beginning of the changing for Athena

STREET SCENE

Athena begins to skip school and befriends the Old One (woman) in the street. She plays the violin with the Old One to help raise some money for her.

LUNEA’S HOME – NIGHT

Athena tells Lunea she has met an old woman who is living on the street and she wants to bring her some food.

Lunea goes with her. The Woman is homeless. Lunea and Athena bring her home.

The Old One announces she knows the Ancient ways of magical healing.

ACT 3:

THE CHURCH – NIGHT

The Old One sends Lunea and Sister Anne through the Door of Remembering with the task to find in their past lives the tools needed.

Lunea leads the way – Sister Anne resist. Lunea grabs her hand pulls her through.

SETS UP The retrieving of what has been lost and is needed for the healing.

TIME TUNNEL MONTAGE

The realize they both witness Jesus’ crucifixion and wept together under an olive tree they each pick up an olive branch and carry it with them.

They travel further and see the war images of burnt homes. Lunea begins to cry. Sister Anne astonished at Lunea’s heart felt response wraps her nun cloak around her and sings gently a hymn to her.

SET UP The witches true heart revealed.

They move on further into the time tunnel.

They find a profound secret from the burning times when they both were burned as witches. They see Athena as a small child having witnessed their death. They both break down and weep as they stare at her.

SETS UP/ Reveal The depth of the three connection

The Council of universal beings lead them forward.

They carry back to the present the flames of the fire that burnt them centuries ago, knowing the sacred healing heart of the witch’s goddesses were instilled in the flames.

THE CHURCH – NIGHT

They place the flame and the olive branches at the foot of Jesus where the sword lays. A miraculous image of the flaming sword appears.

Midpoint Turning Point:

LUNEA’S HOME-NIGHT

The Old One performs a powerful ceremony- “The fusing of the souls between Lunea and Anne to fight evil.

They commit to never betray each other – no matter what.

Both stare deeply into each other’s eyes.

SETS UP for Act 4

VILLAGE STREETS – DAY

The people in the town discover that their Nun and the Witch are secretly friends and begin to plan to attack Lunea and her daughter Athena.

MONTAGE:

SCHOOL – DAY

Athena is rejected even more and bullied in school.

TOWNS PUB – NIGHT

The town’s hatred grows against all of them.

CHURCH – DAY

The brutal discrimination and hatred building forces Anne to stand in her power. She pauses silently and stares at each person. She speaks Jesus words and her heartfelt truth and carry out the mission Father Sinclair was never able to do. To unite the heart of humanity.

SETS UP/REVEAL of her saintly mission

ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair and Sister Anne have a breakthrough moment and he gives her his diary – where he struggled as a preacher and the truths he discovered but kept secret. She reads his words. She walks over to him and blesses him.

Father Sinclair instructs Lunea to join the church.

FIELD – NIGHT

Sister Anne and Lunea meet by the mare who trots over. Lunea helps her up. Lunea opens the gates and Sister Anne rides the horse free through the field and forest. She cries out wildly , forcefully and joyfully a free woman in her dream.

SETS UP/ REVEAL Freedom theme

CHURCH -NEXT DAY

Athena and Lunea sit in the back of the church. People turn around and give her a doubtful somewhat rejecting glance. Sister Anne watches.

PARISH KITCHEN- NIGHT

Sister Anne and Father Sinclair’s ghost continue to discuss what to do.

Sister Anne asks Lunea to share an ancient prayer /text sacred text to the congregation in a Sunday sermon.

Anne reads the Egyptian book of The dead -the carry my heart passage. The Congregation listen cautiously liking the poetic words.

But she doesn’t say where it comes from until she is finished.

SETS UP for theme of twin flames -heart to heart…on grave stone.

Congregation walks out enraged feeling they have been hoodwinked.

Turning Point:

HILL – NIGHT

Lunea and Anne that night steal the church’s smaller crucifix and sword ceremoniously up the hill to the stone statue that strangely looks more and morel like the open arms of Mother Mary. They place the sword in her arms and a small gold crucifix at her heart.

SETS UP The beginning of the end

Sister Anne shyly confesses that she has fallen in love with Lunea.

Lunea stares at her longly -struggles inwardly but puts her finger gently over Sister Anne’s lips and tells her not this lifetime. She secretly knows that she is committed to help Anne become a saint. Lunea looks deeply sad.

They spend the night hand in hand – two souls gazing up at the heavens.

THE REVEAL of their deep love in this life time.

TOWN STREETS – DAY MONTAGE

The congregation finds out gossip grows.

TOWN STREETS – NIGHT

Town people enraged seek Anne and Lunea out with a protest march- they burn down Lunea’s store. March through the streets with torches.

Lunea and Athena hide among the street people.

CHURCH STEPS – DAY

The next day Sister Anne, Lunea and Athena courageously meet at the church. As they walk up the steps, Athena sees the Old One hobbling and she runs over t help her.

A teen who has been bullying Athena from the beginning steps forward with a gun. Both Lunea and Sister Anne see the gun run to protect Athena.

Both Lunea and Sister Anne take the bullet first.

But all three are shot. They collapses on he stairs.

Old One vanishes.

Long silence.

Lunea’s body is on top of Sister Anne’s who covers Athena’s body all lay bleeding on the steps. SILENCE

Faces of awareness and horror of the people-

CHURCH STEPS – DAY

Universal sounds like in the beginning. It looks like a miracle because Athena’s bullet wound is healed by both Lunea’s and Sister Anne’s hands on the wound when a glow of light appears in front of everyone.

Athena raises her head to see – Sister Anne and Lunea dead. Her weeping is chilling. The towns people are silent.

The townspeople have witnessed the miracle. They begin to whisper that a miracle has happened. They never really know who did the healing of Athena because they see Sister Anne’s hand over the wound that has now disappeared and healed.

Athena turns to them and speaks- now as a powerful leader weeping over her beloved Lunea and Sister Anne. She looks up at the people. Same haunting look as in the beginning in the time tunnel.

The spirits of the heavens appear at that moment as Star Beings, Angels, and cloaked Ancients from the Universal Council of Beings.

The townspeople weep with Athena. Athena’s violin os heard.

ACT 4:

THE HILL

They carry one large casket up the hill. Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne are buried together on the hill.

THE TIME TUNNEL (10 YEARS LATER)

Time tunnel appears again. We move forward to the door of the Future. It opens slightly and we see an image of Athena at the pulpit as the new preacher of the church. She plays the violin.

She wears the sign of the Neo-Pagan moon and Christian sun cross on either side of her preacher’s stole.

A glow begins on her heart space and an over lay of the goddess appears. Athena has become the Goddess – returned to Earth holding the sacred flame in her heart.

Congregation listens adoringly. Violin fills the church.

THE HILL – NIGHT

The last image is a gravestone inscribed – ”Here rest Priestess Lunea and Saint Anne side by side. Heart by heart – Soul by soul for all eternity.”

Sound of the doves cooing and then a happy parrot squawk.

THE TIME TUNNEL – NIGHT

The door of time closes once again.

In the dark tunnel of remembering, a flame is lit and we see the original burial of the two Egyptian skeletons that the two female archeologists had discovered 1930s and secretly covered back up. But now between them is the flaming sword.

The last scene is the sacred flame.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Character actions.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH

1. VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

2. THEME: Self-acceptance

What I learned from doing this assignment is Athena character and actions is growing. Also their true nature shows up in their actions. I still need to add the subtle subtext in their actions.

THE NUN AND THE WITCH/ MYSTICAL SCI-FI/ DRAMA

Act 1

Opening:

UNIVERSE – NIGHT

In timeless space two female figures as silhouettes on a starry hill. One (Anne) has her head on the shoulder of the other.

VARIED VOICES and strange BEEPS STAR FLASHES WHISPERS as the Council of Universal Beings appear.

DARK TIME TUNNEL

The two souls (SISTER ANNE 35 and LUNA THUNDER 45) wisp by as they travel through the dark time tunnel.

Flashes of their lives begin to appear first in Egypt.

The shadowy forms watch their first lifetime together. Anne peers over the shoulder of Lunea.

EGYPTIAN TOMB – NIGHT

Two Egyptian slave women each hold an oil lamp. They place their flame side by side. Each pick up a small vessel of serpentine liquid. They stare at each other fondly. Flickers of their flames cast shadows on their face. They pause and drink the poison staring into each others eyes.

SISTER ANNE lays her head on LUNA THUNDER’S shoulder and they hold each other – they close their eyes. A gentle smile appears on their faces. The flames flickers on a sword on the grave. SILENCE

Their shadowy spirits quickly move forward. WOOSH

TIME TUNNEL: MONTAGE – NIGHT

Events through flashes on the walls on the time tunnel.

The 1920’s two female archeologist discover grave of two women skeletons in same position. They look at each other – and quickly cover up the grave knowing it is them.

Lunea reaches out and squeezes the hand of Anne and smirks. Anne giggles like a child.

Fast forward Auschwitz two women stare at each other longingly as one ( Lunea )is taken away holding the hand of a little girl( Athena) Anne collapses to the ground and weeps.

Time tunnel moves faster. Darker and darker –

The shadowy figures of Anne and Lunea wait in front of large metal door with the blood painted words THE REMEMBERING. It CREAKS open. A sound of a violin plays. (Athena 12yr)

They step through Lunea leading the way.

The door SLAMS close behind them.

They turn around and see the other side of the door the words -THE FORGETTING.

They step into the present holding hands. Images of sky scrapper – sound of news reporter war in Ukraine BOMBS-political speeches. (2022)

They let go of each other’s hand. They vanish.

THE HILL -DAWN

Birds greeting the dawn – Sunrise on the back of ancient stone henge type of goddess looking rock. The tall hill looks over a village.

CHAPEL – DAWN

The chapel is slightly run down. Silence.

Sister Anne(35) lights a flame at the prayer candles under a tall statue of Jesus, where a sword lays at his feet. She humbly bows. Tears fill her eyes filled with emotion.

Turns to see if anyone is looking at her. She is alone. Sighs in relief and looks at a stain glass window of Archangel Uriel the sunlight hits the sword and makes it look for a moment like a flaming sword. She gasp like a young child with excited joy.

ATHENA’S BEDROOM -MORNING

Athena (12) with a haunted look sits in a chair and looks out of her window and plays the violin to the dawn.

THE HILL-DAY

Sunrise looks like a flame rising out of the back of the stone goddess Monolith.

Lunea with arms raised powerful to the sunlight, bows reverently with prayer hands and slowly looks up at the towering stone. She grins and begins to dances freely in front of the stone. (Celtic fiddle)

THE PARISH KITCHEN – SAME DAY

Sister Anne makes lovingly breakfast for father Sinclair. Chops apple carefully into small pieces and places on a dish serves it with a boiled egg and toast.

Walks over – half genuflects to him and serves tray. He nods approvingly says grace. She bows her head.

A horses neigh in the window.

She opens her eyes as she prays. Like kid sneaking a peak, she sees the next door neighbors horse grazing in the field. Smiles, takes big breath of joy, like a child with a bit of wildness in her. He sees her looking at the mare. She quickly returns to obedient prayer- tightens her lip and ever so slightly clenches her hands.

Father Sinclair thanks her and smiles as he bites a piece of apple and stares at the turtle dove name MELODY, who quietly coos. He mentions to Anne how much the dove reminds him of her.She smile appreciatively as she gazes at melody.

She pretends to coos and both laugh.

LUNEA’S KITCHEN – SAME DAY

Lunea stands tall and proud. Makes breakfast for Athena (12). Waltzs over and kisses the top of her head. Grabs an apple from the table and quarters it. Grins like a queen as she hands a piece to a small parrot (Eva) who sits on top of her cage and squawks.

Lunea mentions something like – “Ah the forbidden apple my sweet Eve.”Giggles.

ATHENA (12) observes gives the medicinal benefits she has learned about apples when in school in Ukraine. Lunea smiles proudly announcing she is a brilliant child and will go far.

FLEA MARKET – DAY

Crowded market. Sister Anne’s flower print card table is diagonally across from Lunea’s stand filled with crystals wands and other witchy type tools, along with political brochures for women’s right- gay right – black life matters animal rights and more.

They catch glances a few times. Lunea smiles.

Sister Anne smiles then quickly looks away. Lunea nods in a questioning manor and walks over. She admires Sister Anne’s beautiful flower prints. She is selling to raise money for the church. They start up a conversation. Sister Anne looks up to Lunea’s tall stature.

Lunea buys a few cards for her store gives her the extra change kissing the bills with a spell prayer. Tells her about a special flower that grows up the on the hill excitedly.

SISTER ANNE’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Anne has a dream she is picking flowers on the hill and the stone goddess monolith quietly bends over and gives her a single flower that begins to glow. Anne gazes up at the tall stone first adoringly then suddenly shudders.

Anne awakes afraid and yet curious.

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM -DAY

Anne lets Father Sinclair know she is going to spend the afternoon hiking and then adds “with Jesus” up the hill to see the Ancient stone. He frowns and mumbles something about it should have been pulled down years ago. Sister Anne bows her head obediently.

HILL MONTAGE – DAY

Scenes of the two women climb the hill from either side.

Sister Anne while in nature shows her strength and desire to be free and young.

Takes a deep breath clenches her hands to her chest with wonderment and grins.

Sister Anne arrives after Lunea.

Both look surprised.

They start up a longer conversation.

Cloaked OLD ONE (Native American shaman woman) hides hunched over behind big Mother stone and smiles as she listens to them talk. They do not know she is there.

LUNEA’S STORE – DAY

Front window covered with many different traditions posters and flags – native – Goddess – Buhdah ….

Lunea is organizing her shop. Takes a deep breath with pride. Sprinkles Some water in a bottle with a $ sign over herself. Burst out in laughter.

Some teens come into the store and stare at her. She stands tall and stare back at them with a daring look.

They start messing things up. Turn over a table – You evil witch they yell out and dart out the door laughing.

She grabs a Kali stature and raises as she curses at them.

She calls the police yelling. Listens – changes her tone to a pretend soft spoken pace. Shakes her head looks like she is about to burst into tears. Gives up after a short conversation. Slams the phone down. Stares out the door.

Athena walks in and sees the damage and freezes in place as if she has PTSD. She has flashbacks of Ukraine and the war she has fled. She begins to weep with no sound and shakes. Lunea runs over and holds protectively.

THE CHAPEL – SUNSET

Sister Anne is sweeping, then sits down in a pew, gazes at the stature of Jesus with a silver sword at his feet. She starts up a conversation / quote.(must find quote)

The sun sets in the stain window across from Uriel on Mary – it glows in her heart center.

Sister Anne makes a comment about the heart of the mother. She hears the voices and beeps of the Council of the Universe whispering the sign of goddess flame.

PARISH KITCHEN – DAY

Sister Anne and Father Sinclair have dinner across from each other. Knowing he is ill, he instructs her with a parental tone that she must continue the church after he dies and not tell the head church because they will sell the building to the best buyer.

He shares how afraid he is to have his church goers be abandoned and discusses some ideas.A haggard look takes over his expression as he hides his pain.

Sister Anne consoles him and says she will do so. They tell each other their big secrets – He has not had any help from the big church for years and she tells him she was a runaway nun but never stopped being a nun.

They hold each other’s hand as if there is a forgiving and a sacred commitment.

Sister Anne struggles to look at him straight in the eye but finally succeeds and nods yes with a gentle smile.

LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Lunea sits outside looks up at the moon and takes gulps like a man her mug of ale. She is slightly drunk. A frown and tears streams down her cheeks as she builds a stone circle. Carries one large stone as she grunts to the center.

Stands in the center and raises her arms in the sign of female power.

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

He gets out of bed in the dark- opens the window – begins to fall- hobbles over to the cage and open the cage door- a dark shadow and sound of wings as the bird flies out the window.

We hear a thunk on the ground. He has had an heart attack. In the moonlight we see he is smiling.

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM – MORNING

KNOCKING ON DOOR- Sister Anne slowly opens the door- first sees his feet. Rushes over to him. Drops t her knees begins to weep looks up sees the bird cage door and window is open. The dove is sitting up in a tree. Her tears begin.

She sees a notebook on the bedside table with a letter for her. She reads it. He has given her step by step instructions on how to tell the parish that she will lead.

ACT 2

Turning Point:

CHURCH GRAVEYARD – DAY

Funeral – Sister Anne gives the funeral and is wearing father Sinclair’s preacher stole. She reads his chosen words.

The congregation looks up to her. She struggles to find courage give her first words of her leadership.

She quotes part of Jesus words of Matthew 11:28-30

“Come to me, all you who are weary and burdened, and I will give you rest. Take my yoke upon you and learn from me, for I am gentle and humble in heart, and you will find rest for your souls.”

There are some grumblings around the men who do not want to take lead from a woman.

Anne sees them and attempts to stand in her power but falls back into her humble pose.

Takes a deep breath.

Grabs the sword from the statue of Jesus.

Looks down at it. Then quietly stares back at the men.

Nods ceremoniously and walks by them holding the sword in front of her as she follows the casket to the small grave yard on the side of the church.

FIELD – DAY

Sister Anne watches the mare gallop across the field. She smiles with authentic joy as if she was riding her. (over lay of her riding)

ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair returns as a ghost.

He wants her to continue his work. She is afraid and wraps herself in the blanket.

THE HILL – DAY

Sister Anne sits looking out over the town. Prays for help. She feels Jesus’ presence and weeps.

When she looks up from her tears she see Lunea is sitting by her side. They sit side silently.

Lunea tells her it will be alright and hands her a fist size stone from the ground. Telling her to be like the stones.

ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father haunts her warning her that evil forces are taking over the town. She ask why- he hangs his head ashamed- and talks about having forgotten the true teachings of Jesus.

He leads her into the church and shows her the sword laid at Jesus feet- tells her what legend goes along with the sword. It belonged to early pagan settlers. He suggest the answers can be found with the sword. He disappears.

CHURCH – NIGHT

She kneels at Jesus’ feet and prays.

She hears Jesus voice – telling her to guide the people to put down their weapons and that this is the sword of light not of death and must be returned to the proper owners.

She listens and then looks over at the stain glass window with a knight on a horse.Makes The connection.

THE RIVER POOL – DAY

Lunea is swimming naked in the water.

Sister Anne appears and stands silently and longly . Lunea invites her to join her.

Sister Anne refuses because she is a nun. But ultimately jumps into the water playfully with her clothes on.

Flickers of light blends with their giggles and laughter.

VILLAGE MONTAGE – DAY

Different scenes of Sister Anne and Lunea bonding and being playful and enjoying each others company.

SISTER ANNE’S BEDROOM

Father Sinclair appears and is enraged about their friendship banging his fist on the table.

LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Sister Anne seeks help from Lunea knowing she will understand what to do with the hauntings and help banish the evil and might know the history of the sword.

Lunea ask her to take her to the church and let her see the sword.

THE CHAPEL – NIGHT

They both tip toe in.

Lunea reaches out and touches the sword. Sister Anne horrified tries to stop her. But Lunea stands strong and holds her back.

Lunea listen to the mumbles and voices ghostly voices rising in the church. She tell Sister Anne the church had belonged to the pagans who had travel to this coast and joined forces with the native people.

She stair silently at Sister Anne. Then instructs her as if she was the goddess herself that they must join heart flames to fight what is emerging in the town.

Lunea marches over to the alter and lights two candles and walks back.

They enact an ancient ceremony similar as in the Egyptian tomb.

LUNEA’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Lunea has a visitation in a dream by a Council of the Beings guardian that tells her that she must help Sister Anne become a saint. But they do not say how.

The Council of the Universal Beings responds and sends an Ancient female guardian – The OLD ONE to guide them as they set out to fight the hatred, bigotry, and falsehoods that is taking over.

THE VILLAGE -MONTAGE

Ongoing threats at Lunea’s store. She fights back with headlines of what is happening in the world rooted in judgement and hatred. Calls talk show host and gathers a few like minded town people.

SCHOOL – DAY

Bullying builds at school for Athena .

ATHENA’S BEDROOM

Athena sadly plays the violin as a healing.

Lunea walks in listens and they have a deep talk about the horrors of the war and how they must heal humanity.

Athena begins a new song on the violin. Lunea watches her with a teary look of love and gentleness.

STREET SCENE

Athena begins to skip school and befriends the Old One (woman) in the street. She plays the violin with the Old One to help raise some money for her.

LUNEA’S HOME – NIGHT

Athena tells Lunea she has met an old woman who is living on the street and she wants to bring her some food.

Lunea goes with her. The Woman is homeless. Lunea and Athena bring her home.

The Old One announces she knows the Ancient ways of magical healing.

ACT 3:

THE CHURCH – NIGHT

The Old One sends Lunea and Sister Anne through the Door of Remembering with the task to find in their past lives the tools needed.

Lunea leads the way – Sister Anne resist. Lunea grabs her hand pulls her through.

TIME TUNNEL MONTAGE

The realize they both witness Jesus’ crucifixion and wept together under an olive tree they each pick up an olive branch and carry it with them.

They travel further and see the war images of burnt homes. Lunea begins to cry. Sister Anne astonished at Lunea’s heart felt response wraps her nun cloak around her and sings gently a hymn to her.

They move on further into the time tunnel.

They find a profound secret from the burning times when they both were burned as witches. They see Athena as a small child having witnessed their death. They both break down and weep as they stare at her.

The Council of universal beings lead them forward.

They carry back to the present the flames of the fire that burnt them centuries ago, knowing the sacred healing heart of the witch’s goddesses were instilled in the flames.

THE CHURCH – NIGHT

They place the flame and the olive branches at the foot of Jesus where the sword lays. A miraculous image of the flaming sword appears.

Midpoint Turning Point:

LUNEA’S HOME-NIGHT

The Old One performs a powerful ceremony- “The fusing of the souls between Lunea and Anne to fight evil.

They commit to never betray each other – no matter what.

Both stare deeply into each other’s eyes.

VILLAGE STREETS – DAY

The people in the town discover that their Nun and the Witch are secretly friends and begin to plan to attack Lunea and her daughter Athena.

MONTAGE:

SCHOOL – DAY

Athena is rejected even more and bullied in school.

TOWNS PUB – NIGHT

The town’s hatred grows against all of them.

CHURCH – DAY

The brutal discrimination and hatred building forces Anne to stand in her power. She pauses silently and stares at each person.She speaks Jesus words and her heartfelt truth and carry out the mission Father Sinclair was never able to do. To unite the heart of humanity.

ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair and Sister Anne have a breakthrough moment and he gives her his diary – where he struggled as a preacher and the truths he discovered but kept secret. She reads his words. She walks over to him and blesses him.

Father Sinclair instructs Lunea to join the church.

FIELD – NIGHT

Sister Anne and Lunea meet by the mare who trots over. Lunea helps her up. Lunea opens the gates and Sister Anne rides the horse free through the field and forest. She cries out wildly , forcefully and joyfully a free woman in her dream.

CHURCH -NEXT DAY

Athena and Lunea sit in the back of the church. People turn around and give her a doubtful somewhat rejecting glance. Sister Anne watches.

PARISH KITCHEN- NIGHT

Sister Anne and Father Sinclair’s ghost continue to discuss what to do.

Sister Anne asks Lunea to share an ancient prayer /text sacred text to the congregation in a Sunday sermon.

Anne reads the Egyptian book of The dead -the carry my heart passage. The Congregation listen cautiously liking the peotic words.

But she doesn’t say where it comes from until she is finished.

Congregation walks out enraged feeling they have been hoodwinked.

Turning Point:

HILL – NIGHT

Lunea and Anne that night steal the church’s smaller crucifix and sword ceremoniously up the hill to the stone statue that strangely looks more and morel like the open arms of Mother Mary. They place the sword in her arms and a small gold crucifix at her heart.

Sister Anne shyly confesses that she has fallen in love with Lunea.

Lunea stares at her longly -struggles inwardly but puts her finger gently over Sister Anne’s lips and tells her not this lifetime. She secretly knows that she is committed to help Anne become a saint. Lunea looks deeply sad.

They spend the night hand in hand – two souls gazing up at the heavens.

TOWN STREETS – DAY MONTAGE

The congregation finds out gossip grows.

TOWN STREETS – NIGHT

Town people enraged seek Anne and Lunea out with a protest march- they burn down Lunea’s store.March through the strees with torches.

Lunea and Athena hide among the street people.

CHURCH STEPS – DAY

The next day Sister and Anne, Lunea and Athena courageously met a the church. As they walk up the steps, Athena sees teh Old One hobbling and she runs over t help her.

A teen who has been bullying Athena from the beginning steps forward with a gun. Both Lunea and Sister Anne see the gun run to protect Athena.

Both Lunea and Sister Anne take the bullet first.

But all three are shot. They collapses on he stairs.

Old One vanishes.

Long silence.

Lunea body is on top of Sister Anne who covers Athena’s body all lay bleeding on the steps.

CHURCH STEPS – DAY

It looks like a miracle because Athena’s bullet wound is healed by both Lunea’s and Sister Anne’s hands on the wound when a glow of light appears in front of everyone just.

Athena raises her head to see – Sister Anne and Lunea dead. Her weeping is chilling. The towns people are silent.

The townspeople have witnessed the miracle.They begin to whisper that a miracle has happen. They never really know who did the healing of Athena becasue they see Sister Anne’s hand over the wound that has disappeared

Athena turns to them and speaks- now as a powerful leader weeping over her beloved Lunea and Sister Anne.

The spirits of the heavens appear at that moment as Star Beings, Angels, and cloaked Ancients from the Universal Council of Beings. The townspeople have an awakening.

ACT 4:

THE HILL

They carry one large casket up the hill. Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne are buried together on the hill.

THE TIME TUNNEL (10 YEARS LATER)

Time tunnel appears again. We move forward to the door of the Future. It opens slightly and we see an image of Athena at the pulpit as the new preacher of the church. She plays the violin.

She wears the sign of the pagan moon and christian sun cross on either side of her preacher stole.

A glow begins on her heart space and an over lay of the goddess appears. Athena has become the goddess – returned to Earth holding the sacred flame in her heart.

Congregation listens adoringly.

THE HILL – NIGHT

The last image is a gravestone inscribed – Here rest Priestess Lunea and Saint Anne side by side. Heart by heart – Soul by soul for all eternity. Sound of the doves cooing and happy parrot squawk.

THE TIME TUNNEL – NIGHT

The door of time closes once again.

In the dark tunnel of remembering, a flame is lit and we see the original burial of the two Egyptian skeletons that the two female archeologists had discovered 1930’s and secretly covered back up. But now between them is the flaming sword.

The last scene is the sacred flame.

• This reply was modified 2 years, 9 months ago by  Eclipse Neilson.

[Eclipse Neilson]

THE NUN AND THE WITCH

1. VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

What I’ve learned it is still unfolding but there will be changes as I make some discoveries around Athena and the main characters.

2. Deeper Layer” puzzle

The why and how these two women are sent to earth to help save the heart of humanity.(I’ve discovered now that Athena is core to the sacred mission and will be the secret reveal in the end)

3.Surface Layer:

Two profoundly spiritual women of opposite orientation bond.

4. Deeper Layer:

They have a sacred mission together and life times of deep connection -The nun is destined to become a saint in this life time and it will be the witch that helps her accomplish her task.

5. Major Reveal:

Athena in the end is the goddess returned through a child of war.

The Old One (mentor character) Native American woman – a guardian from the Council of Universal Beings

6. Influences Surface Story

Opposition from the church people, extreme religious right and white supremest attack Lunea thunder the Priestess Witch.

Hints: Anger builds with threats and rejection from the towns people comments and nasty actions-

Teen thugs damage the Lunea’s store.

Begin to bully Athena Lunea’s daughter (or maybe niece).

Lunea the Witch is a political activist and is causing an uproar in the mostly conservative town that doesn’t want to hear about the problems of the world.

7. THE BEATS

THE NUN AND THE WITCH/ MYSTICAL SCI-FI/ DRAMA

Act 1

Opening:

UNIVERSE – NIGHT

In timeless space two figures as silhouettes on a starry hill.

VARIED VOICES and strange BEEPS STAR FLASHES WHISPERS as the Council of Universal Beings appear.

DARK TIME TUNNEL

The two souls (SISTER ANNE 35 and LUNA THUNDER 45) wisp by as they travel through the dark time tunnel.

Flashes of their lives begin to appear-first in Egypt.

The shadowy forms watch their first lifetime together.

EGYPTIAN TOMB – NIGHT

Two Egyptian slave women holds a small vessel of serpentine liquid. They stare at each other fondly. Flickers of flame from a torch near by cast on their face. They pause and drink the poison.

SISTER ANNE lays her head on LUNA THUNDER’S shoulder and hold each other – they close their eyes. The torch flickers on a sword on the grave. SILENCE

Their shadowy spirits quickly move forward. WOOSH

TIME TUNNEL: MONTAGE – NIGHT

Events through flashes on the walls on the time tunnel.

The 1920’s two female archeologist discover grave of two women skeletons in same position. They look at each other – and quickly cover up the grave knowing it is them.

Fast forward Auschwitz two women stare at each other longingly as one is taken away holding the hand of a little girl( Athena)

Time tunnel moves faster. Darker and darker –

The shadowy figures of Anne and Lunea wait in front of large metal door with the blood painted words THE REMEMBERING. It CREAKS open.

They step through.

The door SLAMS close behind them.

They turn around and see the other side of the door the words -THE FORGETTING.

They step into the present Images of sky scrapper – sound of news reporter war in ukraine (2022)

THE HILL -DAWN

Birds greeting the dawn – Sunrise on the back of ancient stone henge type of goddess looking rock. The tall hill looks over a village.

CHAPEL – DAWN

The chapel is slightly run down.

Sister Anne lights a flame at the prayer candles under a tall statue of Jesus, where a sword lays at his feet. Sister Anne gently bows. Tears fill her eyes filled with emotion.

Turns and looks at a stain glass window of Archangel Uriel the sunlight hits the sword and makes it look for a moment like a flaming sword.

THE HILL-DAY

Sunrise looks a flame rising out of the back of the Monolith stone goddess. Lunea with arms raised to the sunlight, bows reverently with prayer hands slowly looks up, smiles and dances in front of the stone.

THE PARISH KITCHEN – SAME DAY

Sister Anne makes breakfast for father Sinclair. Chops apple into small pieces and places on a dish serves it with a boiled egg and toast.

Walks over genuflects to him and serves tray. He nods approvingly says grace. She bows.

Opens her eyes as she prays as she sees the next door neighbors horse grazing in the field. Smiles like a child with a bit of wildness in her. He sees her looking at the mare.She quickly returns to obedient prayer.

Father Sinclair thanks her and smiles as he bites a piece of apple and stares at the turtle dove name MELODY.She quietly coos. He mentions how much the dove reminds him of her.

LUNEA’S KITCHEN – SAME DAY

Lunea makes breakfast for Athena walks over and kisses the top of her head grabs an apple from table and quarters it. Hands a piece to a small parrot (Eva) who sits on top of her cage. Squawks.

Lunea mentions something like – “Ah the forbidden apple my sweet Eve.”Giggles.

ATHENA 14 gives the medicinal benefits she has learned about apples when in school in Ukraine. Lunea smiles announcing she is a brilliant child and will go far.

FLEA MARKET – DAY

Crowded market. Sister Anne’s flower print stand is diagonally across from Lunea’s stand filled with crystals wands and other witchy type tools, along with political brochures for women’s right- gay right – black life matters animal rights and more.

They catch glances a few times.

Sister Anne smiles. Lunea nods and walks over and admires Sister Anne’s beautiful flower prints she is selling to raise money for the church. They start up a conversation.

Lunea buys a few for her store gives her extra change. Tells her about a special flower that grows up the on the hill.

SISTER ANNE’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Anne has a dream she is picking flowers on the hill and the stone goddess monolith quietly bends over and gives her a single flower that begins to glow.

Anne awakes afraid and yet curious.

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM -DAY

Anne lets Father Sinclair know she is going to spend the afternoon hiking and then adds “with Jesus” up the hill to see the Ancient stone. He frowns and mumbles something about it should have been pulled down years ago. Sister Anne bows her head.

HILL MONTAGE – DAY

Scenes of the two women climb the hill from either side.

Sister Anne arrives after Lunea.

Both look surprised.

They start up a longer conversation.

CLOAKED OLD ONE (NATIVE AMERICAN SHAMAN WOMAN) HIDES BEHIND BIG MOTHER STONE AND SMILES AS SHE LISTENS TO THEM TALK. THEY DO NOT KNOW SHE IS THERE.

LUNEA’S STORE – DAY

Front window covered with many different traditions posters and flags – native – Goddess – Buhdah ….

Lunea is organizing her shop.

Some teens come into the store and stare at her and start messing things up. Turn over a table – You evil witch they yell out and dart out the door laughing.

She calls the police but gives up after a short conversation. Slams the phone down.

Athena walks in and sees the damage and has flashbacks of Ukraine and the war she has fled. She begins to weep. Lunea runs over and holds.

THE CHAPEL – SUNSET

Sister Anne is sweeping, then sits down in a pew, gazes at the stature of Jesus with a silver sword at his feet. She starts up a conversation / quote.(must find quote)

The sun sets in the stain window across from Uriel on Mary – it glows in her heart center.

Sister Anne makes a comment about the heart of the mother. She hears the voices and beeps of the Council of the Universe whispering the sign of goddess flame.

PARISH KITCHEN – DAY

Sister Anne and Father Sinclair have dinner. Knowing he is ill,he tells her she must continue the church after he dies and not tell the head church.

He shares how afraid he is to have his church goers be abandoned and discusses some ideas.

Sister Anne consoles him and says she will do so. They tell each other their big secrets – He has not had any help from the big church for years and she tells him she was a runaway nun but never stopped being a nun. They hold each other’s hand as if there is a forgiving and a sacred commitment.

LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Lunea sits outside looks up at the moon and takes one more sip of ale.She is slightly drunk. A frown and tears streams down her cheeks as she builds a stone circle.

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

He gets out of bed in the dark- opens the window- begins to fall- hobbles over to the cage and open the cage door- a dark shadow and sound of wings as the bird flies out the window.

We hear a thunk on the ground. He has had an heart attack. In the moonlight we see he is smiling.

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM – MORNING

KNOCKING ON DOOR- Sister Anne slowly opens the door- first sees his feet. Rushes over to him. Drops t her knees begins to weep looks up sees the bird cage door and window is open. The dove is sitting up in a tree. Her tears beg.

She sees a notebook on the bedside table with a letter for her. She reads it giving her step by step instructions how to tell the parish that she will lead.

ACT 2

Turning Point:

CHURCH GRAVEYARD – DAY

Funeral – Sister Anne gives the funeral and is wearing father Sinclair’s preacher stole. She reads his chosen words.

The congregation looks up to her. She struggles to find courage give her first words of her leadership.

She quotes part of Jesus words of Matthew 11:28-30

“Come to me, all you who are weary and burdened, and I will give you rest. Take my yoke upon you and learn from me, for I am gentle and humble in heart, and you will find rest for your souls.”

There are some grumblings around the men who do not want to take lead from a woman. Anne sees them and attempts to stand in her power.

Nods to them as she ceremoniously walks by them holding the sword in front of her following the casket to the small grave yard on the side of the church.

FIELD – DAY

Sister Anne watches the mare gallop across the field. She smiles as if she was riding her. (over lay of her riding)

ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair returns as a ghost.

He wants her to continue his work. She is afraid.

THE HILL – DAY

Sister Anne sits looking out over the town. Prays for help. She feels Jesus’ presence and she weeps.

When she looks up from her tears she see Lunea sitting by her side. They sit side silently by side. Lunea tells her it will be alright.

ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father haunts her warning her that evil forces are taking over the town. She ask why- he hangs his head ashamed- and talks about having forgotten the teaching s of Jesus.

He takes her into the church and shows her the sword laid at Jesus feet- tells her what legend goes along with the sword. It belonged to early pagan settlers. He suggest the answers can be found with the sword. He disappears.

CHURCH – NIGHT

She kneels at Jesus’ feet and prays.

She hears Jesus voice – telling her to guide the people to put down their weapons and that this is the sword of light not of death and must be returned to the proper owners.

THE POND – DAY

Lunea is swimming naked in the water and Sister Anne appears. Lunea invites her to join her. Sister Anne refuses because she is a nun. But ultimately jumps into the water playfully with her clothes on.

Flickers of light blends with their giggles and laughter.

VILLAGE MONTAGE – DAY

Different scenes of Sister Anne and Lunea bonding and being playful and enjoying each others company.

SISTER ANNE’S BEDROOM

Father Sinclair appears and becomes enraged about their friendship.

LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Sister Anne seeks help from Lunea knowing she will understand what to do with the hauntings and help banish the evil and might know the history of the sword.

Lunea ask her to take her to the church and let her see the sword.

THE CHAPEL – NIGHT

They realize as they become closer, that they must join heart flames to fight what is emerging in the town. The enact an ancient ceramony.

LUNEA’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Lunea has a visitation in a dream by a Council of the Beings guardian that tells her that she must help Sister Anne become a saint. But they do not say how.

The Council of the Universal Beings responds and sends an Ancient female guardian – The OLD ONE to guide them as they set out to fight the hatred, bigotry, and falsehoods that is taking over.

THE VILLAGE -MONTAGE

Ongoing threats at Lunea’s store. She fights back with headlines of what is happening in the world rooted in judgement and hatred.

SCHOOL – DAY

Bullying builds at school for Athena .

ATHENA’S BEDROOM

She breaks down. (She plays the violin as a healing.) Lunea walks in listens and they have a deep talk about the horrors of the ward and humanity.

STREET SCENE

Athena begins to skip school and befriends the Old One (woman) in the street. She plays the violin with the Old One to help raise some money for her.

LUNEA’S HOME – NIGHT

Athena tells Lunea she has met an old woman who is living on the street and she wants to bring her some food.

Lunea goes with her. The Woman is homeless. Lunea and Athena bring her home.

The Old One announces she knows the Ancient ways of magical healing.

ACT 3:

THE CHURCH – NIGHT

The Old One sends Lunea and Sister Anne through the Door of Remembering with the task to find in their past lives the tools needed.

TIME TUNNEL MONTAGE

The realize they both witness Jesus’ crucifixion and wept together.

They travel further and see the war images of burnt homes.

They find a profound secret from the burning times when they both were burned as witches. They see Athena as a small child having witnessed their death. They both break down and weep. The Council of universal beings lead them forward.

They carry back to the present the flames of the fire that burnt them centuries ago, knowing the sacred healing heart of the witch’s goddesses were instilled in the flames.

THE CHURCH – NIGHT

They place the flame at the foot of Jesus where the sword lays. A miraculous image of the flaming sword appears.

Midpoint Turning Point:

LUNEA’S HOME-NIGHT

The Old One performs a powerful ceremony- “The fusing of the souls between Lunea and Anne to fight evil.

They commit to never betray each other – no matter what.

VILLAGE STREETS – DAY

The people in the town discover that their Nun and the Witch are secretly friends and begin to plan to attack Lunea and her daughter Athena.

SCHOOL – DAY

Athena is rejected even more and bullied in school.

TOWNS PUB – NIGHT

The town’s hatred grows against all of them.

CHURCH – DAY

The brutal discrimination and hatred building forces Anne to stand in her power speak her heartfelt truth and carry out the mission Father Sinclair was never able to do.To unite the heart of humanity.

ANNE’S ROOM – NIGHT

Father Sinclair and Sister Anne have a breakthrough moment and he gives her his diary – where he struggled as a preacher and the truths he discovered but kept secret. She reads his words.

Father Sinclair instructs Lunea to join the church.

FIELD – NIGHT

Sister Anne and Lunea meet by the mare who trots over. Lunea helps her up. Lunea opens the gates and Sister Anne rides the horse free through the feild and forest.

CHURCH – DAY

Athena and Lunea sit in the back of the church. People turn around and give her a doubtful somewhat rejecting glance. Sister Anne watches.

PARISH KITCHEN- NIGHT

Sister Anne and Father Sinclair’s ghost continue to discuss what to do.

Sister Anne asks Lunea to share an ancient prayer /text sacred text to the congregation in a Sunday sermon.

Anne reads the Egyptian book of The but doesn’t say where it comes from until she is finished.

Congregation walks out enraged.

Turning Point:

HILL – NIGHT

Lunea and Anne that night steal the church’s crucifix and carry it ceremoniously up the hill to the stone statue that strangely looks more and morel like the open arms of Mother Mary. They place the sword in her arms and a small gold crucifix at her heart.

They spend the night hand in hand – two souls gazing up at the heavens .

TOWN STREETS – DAY MONTAGE

The congregation finds out gossip grows.

TOWN STREETS – NIGHT

Town people enraged seek Anne and Lunea out with a protest march- they burn down Lunea’s store.

Lunea and Athena hide among the street people.

CHURCH STEPS -DAY

There is a shooting on the steps of the church by a teen who has been bullying Athena from the beginning.

Both Lunea and Sister Anne take the bullet first while trying to protect Athena who has run over to help the Old One up the stairs.

But all three are shot.

Old One vanishes.

Long silence.

Lunea collapses on top of Sister Anne who covers Athena body all lay bleeding on the steps.

CHURCH STEPS – DAY

It looks like a miracle because Athena’s bullet wound is healed by both Lunea’s and Sister Anne’s hands on the wound when a glow of light appears in front of everyone just before. Athena raises her head to see – Sister Anne and Lunea dead. He weeping is chilling.

The townspeople have witnessed the miracle. They never really know who did the healing of Athena –

Athena turns to them and speaks- now as a powerful leader .

The spirits of the heavens appear at that moment as Star Beings, Angels, and cloaked Ancients from the Universal Council of Beings. The townspeople have an awakening.

ACT 4:

THE HILL

They carry one large casket up the hill. Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne are buried together on the hill.

THE TIME TUNNEL (10 YEARS LATER)

Time tunnel appears again. We move forward to the door of the Future. It opens slightly and we see an image of Athena at the pulpit as the new preacher of the church.

She wears the sign of the pagan moon and christian sun cross on either side of her preacher stole.

A glow begins on her heart space and an over lay of the goddess appears. Athena has become the goddess – returned to Earth holding the sacred flame in her heart.

Congregation listens adoringly.

THE HILL – NIGHT

The last image is a gravestone inscribed – Here rest Priestess Lunea and Saint Anne side by side. Heart by heart – Soul by soul for all eternity. Sound of the doves cooing and happy parrot squawk.

THE TIME TUNNEL – NIGHT

The door of time closes once again.

In the dark tunnel of remembering, a flame is lit and we see the original burial of the two Egyptian skeletons that the two female archeologists had discovered 1930’s and secretly covered back up. But now between them is the flaming sword.

The last scene is the sacred flame.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Deeper Layer!

THE NUN AND THE WITCH

1.VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

What I’ve learned it is still unfolding but there will be changes as I make some discoveries around Athena and the main characters.

2.Deeper Layer” puzzle

Why and how are these two women sent to earth to help save the heart of humanity.

3.Surface Layer:

Two opposite profoundly spiritual women befriend each other.

4. Deeper Layer:

They have a sacred mission together and life times of deep connection and the nun is destine to become a saint in this life time and it will be the witch that helps her.

5. Major Reveal:

The Old One (Native American woman)is a guardian from the Council of Universal Beings

6.Influences Surface Story

Opposition from the church people and extreme religious right, and white supremest.

Hints: anger builds with threats and rejection from their comment-

Teen thugs damage the Lunea’s store. Begin to bully Athena Lunea’s daughter.

Lunea the Witch is a political activist and is causing an uproar.

7. THE BEATS

THE NUN AND THE WITCH/ MYSTICAL SCI-FI DRAMA

Act 1

Opening:

UNIVERSE

In timeless space two figures are silhouettes on the hill as if it was above the stars.

VARIED VOICES and strange BEEPS STAR FLASHES of the council of Universal beings.

DARK TIME TUNNEL

Two soul wisp travel through images the dark and pause at first lifetime. Flashes of their lives begins with

EGYPTIAN TOMB

Two Egyptian women, each holds a small vessel of liquid . They stare at each other fondly flickers of flame from a torch near by. Pause drink poison and lay down in a grave-like space.

SISTER ANNE 35 lays her head on LUNA THUNDER’S shoulder and they hold hands – close eyes. The torch flickers on a sword on the grave.

TIME TUNNEL: MONTAGE

Time flashes on the walls on the time tunnel.

The 20’s two female archeologist discover grave two women skeletons in same position. They look at each other – and quickly cover up the grave.

Fast forward Auschwitz two women stare at each other as one is taken away.

Time tunnel moves faster. Darker and darker –

The shadowy figures of Anne and Luna in front of large metal door words THE REMEMBERING. It CREAKS open. They step through.

The door SLAMS close behind them other side of door is THE FORGETTING.

Open door to the present (2022)

THE HILL

Sunrise over the tall hill that looks over the town on the back of ancient goddess looking stone henge type of rock.

CHAPEL

The chapel is slightly run down.

Sister (Anne) lights a flame at the prayer candles placed at the feet of Jesus where a sword lays. Sister Anne gently bows. Tears fill her eyes.

Turns and looks at a stain glass window of Archangel Uriel the sunlight hits the sword and makes it look for a moment like a flaming sword.

THE HILL

Sunrise. Lunea with arms raised to the sunlight, turns to the stone monolith and with prayer hands bows reverently then she slowly looks up smiles and dances in front of the stone.

THE PARISH KITCHEN

Makes breakfast for father Sinclair. Sister Anne chops apple into small pieces and places on a dish serves it with a boiled egg and toast.

Walks over genuflects to him and serves tray/ He nods approvingly says grace she bows an opens one when she sees a the next door neighbors horse grazing in the field. Smiles like a child returns to obedient prayer.

Father Sinclair thanks her and smiles as he bites a piece of apple and stares at the turtle dove name MELODY.

LUNEA’S KITCHEN

Lunea makes breakfast for Athena walks over and kisses the top of her head grabs an apple from table and quarters it. Hands a piece to small parrot (Eva) who sits on top of his cage. Squawks .

Lunea mention something like – “Ah the forbidden apple my sweet Eve.”

ATHENA 17 gives the medicinal benefits she has learned about apples at school.

FLEA MARKET

Crowded Sister and is diagonally across from Lunea who has a stand full of crystals wands and other witchy type tools along with mega political brochures for women’s right- gay right – black life matters animal rights and more

They catch glances a few times. Sister Anne smiles. Lunea walks over and admires her beautiful flower prints buys a few for her store. Tells her she will raise money for her.

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM

Anne lets him know she is going to spend the afternoon hiking with Jesus.

HILL MONTAGE

Scenes of the two climb hill from either side.

Sister Anne arrives after Lunea. Both look surprised.

They start up a longer conversation

Cloaked OLD ONE ( Native American shaman woman) sits behind big Mother stone and smiles as she listens to them talk. They do not know she is there.

Lunea’s store

Covered with many different traditions posters and flags – native – Goddess _ Buhdah ….

Lunea is organizing her shop.

Some teens come in stare at her and start messing things up. Turn over a table – You evil witch the yell out and dart out the door.

She calls the police but gives up after a short conversation. Slams the phone down.

THE CHAPEL

Sister Anne is sweeping then sits down in a pew gazes at the stature of Jesus that stands with a silver sword at his feet. She starts up a conversation / quote.

The sun sets in the Stain window across from Uriel is of Saint Patrick. Anne looks at him and shakes her head curiously with an asking why glance.

PARISH KITCHEN – DAY

Sister Anne and Father Sinclair have dinner. He tells her she must continue the church after he dies and not tell the head church.

He shares how afraid he is to have his church goers be abandoned and discusses some ideas.

Sister Anne consoles him and says she will do so. They tell each other their big secrets – He has not had any help from the big church for years and she tells him she was a runaway nun but never stopped being a nun. They hold each other’s hand as if there is a forgiving.

LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Lunea sits out side looks up at the moon and takes one more sip of ale. A frown and a tear streams down her cheek.

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM -NIGHT

He gets out of bed in the dark- opens the window- begins to fall- hobbles over to the cage and opens the cage door- a dark shadow and sound of wings as the bird flies out the window.

We hear a thunk on the ground. He has had an heart attack. In the moonlight we see he is smiling.

FATHER SINCLAIR’S BEDROOM

KNOCKING ON DOOR- Sister Anne slowly opens the door- first sees his feet . Rushes over to him. Drops to her knees begins to weep looks up sees the bird cage door and window is open. The dove is sitting up in a tree. Her tears begin.

She sees a notebook on the bedside table with a letter for her. She reads it giving her step by step instructions.

ACT 2

Turning Point:

CHURCH GRAVEYARD – DAY

Funeral – Sister Anne gives the funeral and is wearing father Sinclair’s stole and reads his words chosen to them .The congregation looks up to her and she must find courage give her first words of leadership.

She quotes part of Jesus words of Matthew 11:28-30

“Come to me, all you who are weary and burdened, and I will give you rest. Take my yoke upon you and learn from me, for I am gentle and humble in heart, and you will find rest for your souls.”

There are some grumblings around the men who do not want to take lead from a woman.

ANNE’S ROOM- NIGHT

Father Sinclair returns as a ghost.

He promise to guide but wants control- she is afraid.

THE HILL

She sit out and prays for help. She feels Jesus’s presence and she weeps.

When she looks up from her tears she see Lunea sitting by her side. They Sit side by side. Lunea tells her it will be alright.

ANNE’S ROOM

Father begins to haunt her warning her that evil forces are taking over the town. Takes her into the church and shows her the sword laid at Jesus feet- tells her what legend goes along with the sword. Belong to earlier pagan settlers.He disappears .She Kneels at his Jesus feet and prays.

She hears Jesus voice- telling them yp put down your weapons this is the sword of light not of death.

LUNEA’S HOME PORCH – NIGHT

Lost and overwhelmed Sister Anne seeks help from Priestess Lunea knowing she will understand what to do with the hauntings and help banish the evil.

Lunea ask her to her the church and let her see the sword.

THE CHAPEL-NIGHT

They realize as they become closer, that they must join heart flames to fight what is emerging in the town.

LUNEA’S BEDROOM – NIGHT

Lunea has a visitation in a dream by a Council of the Beings guardian.

The Council of the Universal Beings responds and sends an Ancient female guardian – The OLD ONE to guide them as they set out to fight the hatred, bigotry, and falsehoods that is taking over.

Contuined threats at Lunea’s store. She fghts bak with headlines of what is happening n the world rooted in judgement and hatred.

SCHOOL

Bullying starts at school for Athena

ATHENA’S BEDROOM

She breaks down.

STREET SCENE

Athena begins to skip school and befriends the Old one (woman) in the street.

LUNEA’S HOME – NIGHT

Athena tells Lunea she has met an old woman who is living on the street and she want to being her some food.

Lunea goes with her. The Woman is homeless. Lunea insist to bring her home.

ACT 3:

THE CHURCH – NIGHT

The Old One sends Lunea and Sister Anne through the Door of Remembering with the task to find in their past lives clues that appear as flashes and symbols for them to return to the present with as healing tools for all. The time tunnel is now the light in the statue of Jesus heart.

TIME TUNNEL MONTAGE

The realize they both witness Jesus’ crucifixion and wept together.

The travel further and see the war images of burnt homes.

They find a profound secret from the burning times when they both were burned as witches. They both carry back carefully the flames of the fire that burnt them. The place flame at the foot of Jesus where the sword lays. A miraculous image of the flaming swrod appears.

Midpoint Turning Point:

LUNEA’S HOME-NIGHT

The Old One performs a powerful ceremony- “The fusing of the souls between Lunea and Anne to fight evil with the sword.

They commit to never betray each other – no matter what.

ACT 3:

VILLAGE STREETS- DAY

The people in the town discover that their Nun and the Witch are secretly friends and begin to plan to attacks Lunea and her daughter Athena.

SCHOOL – DAY

Athena is rejected and bullied in school.

TOWNS PUB

The town’s hatred grows against all of them.

CHURCH

The brutal discrimination and hatred building forces Anne to stand in her power speak her heartfelt truth and carry out the mission Father Sinclair was never able to do.

ANNE’S ROOM

Father Sinclair and Sister Anne have a breakthrough moment and he gives her his diary -where he struggled as a preacher and the truths he discovered but kept secret. She begins to use his words.

Father Sinclair instructs Lunea to join the church.

One Sunday Sister Anne asks Lunea to share her understanding of the sacred text. Anne reads the Egyptian book of The dead but doesn’t say where it comes from until she is finished. Congregation walks out enraged.

Turning Point:

HILL

Lunea and Anne one night steal the church’s crucifix and carry it ceremoniously up the hill to the stone statue that strangely looks more and morel like the open arms of Mother Mary. They place the sword in her arms and small gold crucifix medalion at her heart.

TOWN STREETS

The congregation finds out. Town people enraged they seek Anne and Lunea out with a protest march- they burn down Lunea’s store.

CHURCH STEPS

There is a shooting on the steps of the church by a teen who has been bullying Athena from the beginning. Both Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne take the bullet first while trying to protect Athena who has run over to help the Old One up the stairs. But all are shot. Old One vanishes. Long silence. Lunea on top of Sister Anne on top of Athena all lay bleeding on the steps.

CHURCH STEPS

It looks like a miracle because Athena’s bullet wound is healed by both Lunea’s and Sister Anne’s hands on the wound when a glow of light appears in front of everyone just before they collapse and die.

The townspeople witness the miracle. They never really know who did the healing of Athena –

The spirits of the heavens appear at that moment as Star Beings, Angels, and cloaked Ancients from the Universal Council of Beings. The townspeople have an awakening.

ACT 4:

THE HILL

They carry one large casket up the hill. Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne are buried together on the hill (their favorite place.)

THE TIME TUNNEL (10 YEARS LATER)

Time tunnel appears again. We move forward to the door of the Future. It opens slightly and we see an image of Athena

Athena is now at the pulpit as the new preacher of the church.She wears the sign of the pagan moon and christian sun cross on either side of her priestess/Preacher stoll.

Congregation listens adoringly.

THE HILL

The last image is a gravestone inscribed – Here rest Priestess Lunea and Saint Anne side by side. Heart by heart – Soul by soul for all eternity. Sound of the doves cooing. and happy parrot squawk.

THE TIME TUNNEL

The door of time closes once again.

In the dark tunnel of remembering, a flame is lit and we see the original burial of the two Egyptian skeletons that the two female archeologists had discovered 1930’s and secretly covered back up. But now between them is the flaming sword.

The last scene is the sacred flame.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Deeper Layer!

VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

What I learned from doing this assignment is that I need some time to let the story unfold in my head so as to find the depths of these characters. To decide whether Athena will be Lunea’s daughter or niece and to know more of Athena’s back story.

TITLE: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

4. Genre: SCI -FI / DRAMA

Surface: A Nun and a Witch cross paths and bond to help fight religious discrimination.

Deeper: Each will set the other free from tragic emotional wounds as they discover they have been lovers in many of their lifetimes together.

Major Reveal: In the 3rd ACT

It looks like a miracle because Athena’s bullet wound is healed by both Lunea’s and Sister Anne’s hands in front of everyone just before they collapse and die. The townspeople witness the miracle. They never really know who did the healing of Athena – But the spirits of the heavens appear at that moment as Star Beings, Angels, and cloaked Ancients from the Universal Council of Beings. The townspeople have an awakening about love.

The Big reveal – The future- 10 years later Athena is now the priestess/preacher of the church where the god and goddess stand side by side. Image is a gravestone inscribed – Here rest Priestess Lunea and Saint Anne side by side. Heart by heart – Soul by soul for all eternity. We go into the dark earth and see the original grave the two archeologist had discovered in the 1950’s of the two women resting in each others arms but now is the sacred sword and flame

Hints throughout the story that this is another Romeo and Juliet tale.

Changes Reality: it takes a miracle for the town to honor love -thus saving the love of huanity.

ACT I

Opening:

Takes place in the starry heavens of eternity. Silence and echoing voices and coded beeps in the universe.

Two silhouettes of cloaked souls (Lunea and Anne ) leaning side by side lovingly gazing at the heavens. ( hints at their deep bond) The Council of the Universal Beings appears and sends them on a mission to help save the (sacred flame) of humanity from being extinguished.

(Lunea and Anne ) souls move through a time tunnel. Flashes of their love and tragic endings of each of their many lives together appear. With each lifetime a star appears in the universe forming its personal star constellation.

They begin with their Egyptian lifetime – where they drank poison to rest peacefully in each other’s arms in all eternity together.(hints at the ending)

They continue to flash through lifetimes that are relevant to the story and mission

Their life before the present one is in 1930s when they are female archeologists. They discover their ancient grave but quickly rebury it realizing it must be kept a sacred secret. This grave will be revealed at the end.)

They arrive at the closed Door of Remembering and slip through to their present life. The door slams behind them. All memories are gone.

The first image is on a hill above a church in a small town. It has a female-stone henge type statue.

In the present: Lunea and Anne’s lives are opposite –

Lunea is a witchy priestess trying to set up a new age shop and raise a young daughter as a single parent.

Anne is an obedient nun serving a domineering minister who is trying to keep an ailing congregation from falling apart.

Lunea and Sister Anne get to know each other and slowly build a secret bond, yet both are cautious and doubtful they can ever become the best of friends out in the world. ( hints of the hatred and discrimination )

Inciting Incident:

Father Sinclair dies leaving Sister Anne to carry on, knowing the church will close if she fails. She must take his place as a minister.

Turning Point:

Father Sinclair returns as a ghost seeking redemption and begins to haunt her warning her that evil forces are taking over the town.

Lost and overwhelmed Sister Anne seeks help from Priestess Lunea knowing she will understand what to do with the hauntings and help banish the evil. They realize as they become closer, that they must join heart flames to fight what is emerging in the town.

The Council of the Universal Beings responds and sends an Ancient female guardian – The OLD ONE to guide them as they set out to fight the hatred, bigotry, and falsehoods that is taking over.

ACT 2:

The Old One sends Lunea and Sister Anne through the Door of Remembering with the task to find in their past lives clues that appear as flashes and symbols for them to return to the present with as healing tools for all. (They find a profound secret from the burning times when they both were burned as witches. They return with the Flaming Sword.

Midpoint Turning Point:

The Old One performs a powerful ceremony- “The fusing of the souls between Lunea and Anne to fight evil with the sword. They commit to never betray each other – no matter what.

ACT 3:

The people in the town discover that their Nun and the Witch are secretly friends and begin to attack Lunea and her daughter Athena. She is rejected and bullied in school. The town’s hatred grows against all of them. This forces Anne to stand in her power speak her heartfelt truth and carry out the mission Father Sinclair was never able to do.

Father Sinclair and Sister Anne have a breakthrough moment and he gives her his diary -where he struggled as a preacher and the truths he discovered but kept secret. She begins to use his words.

New plan:

The Old One and Father Sinclair instruct Lunea to join the church. One Sunday Sister Anne asks Lunea to share her understanding of the sacred text. The congregation walks out enraged.

Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift.

Lunea and Anne one night steal the church’s crucifix and carry it ceremoniously up the hill to the stone statue that strangely looks more and morel like the open arms of Mother Mary. They place the crucifix in her arms.

The congregation finds out. Enraged they seek Anne and Lunea out. There is a shooting on the steps of the church. Both Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne take the bullet first while trying to protect Athena. But all are shot.

ACT 4:

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:

It looks like a miracle because Athena’s bullet wound is healed by both Lunea’s and Sister Anne’s hands in front of everyone just before they collapse and die. The townspeople witness the miracle. They never really know who did the healing of Athena – But the spirits of the heavens appear at that moment as Star Beings, Angels, and cloaked Ancients from the Universal Council of Beings. The townspeople have an awakening.

They carry one large casket up the hill. Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne are buried together on the hill (their favorite place.)

Time tunnel appears again. We move forward to the door of the Future. It opens slightly and we see an image of Athena (Lunea’s daughter ) at the pulpit as the new preacher of the church.

The last image is a gravestone inscribed – Here rest Priestess Lunea and Saint Anne side by side. Heart by heart – Soul by soul for all eternity.

The door of time closes once again.

In the dark tunnel of remembering, a flame is lit and we see the original burial of the two Egyptian skeletons that the two female archeologists had discovered 1930’s and secretly covered back up. But now between them is the flaming sword

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Eclipse Neilson : Character Structure

VISION:

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

SISTER ANNE a nun who secretly run away from her cloister, has come into this lifetime to complete her soul’s journey to become a saint

What I have learned is that by keeping a blank slate and slowly letting ideas form is hard but at time fun.

Protagonist 1

Opening: From the heavens Sister Anne with Lunea Thunder are sent back to Earth by the Council of universal beings to help save humanity. They travel through a time tunnel seeing flashes of lifetime after lifetime of each with a tragic ending sometimes by the hand of Father Sinclair in his many lifetimes with them

In the present Sister Anne is a shy, humble, and shamed by her past nun working under the strict guidance of Father Sinclair – a “go by the church rule” minister.

Inciting Incident: She sees a vision of Jesus standing lovingly next to Lunea Thunder (the town witch) at a flea market and is drawn to find out why. Thus begins her path in this lifetime with Lunea Thunder.

Turning Point 1 Father Sinclair dies leaving her to save the church. He begins to haunt her. She is overwhelmed by loss and fear and seeks help from Lunea who has psychic gifts and knows an ancient shaman

Act 2:

Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: Sister Anne sees the cruel hatred and discrimination emerging in the village in so many different ways. She knows she must find her courage to lead them back to love. But to complicate things she realizes she is secretly falling in love with Lunea and the congregation has picked up on it and are ready to undermine their friendship.

Act 3:

Turning Point 3: the disapproving congregation begins to increase their hatred and divide against Sister Anne and Lunea. Sister Anne must find courage when The Old shaman tells her that the two must steal the crucifix and place it in the arms of the Mother stone at the top of the ancient hill behind the church.

Act 4

Climax:
Resolution: A teen believes he is doing the right thing and having been ignored by Athena- Lunea’s niece, sets out to shoot all of them at church. He murders Sister Anne and Lunea and wounds Athena. In that moment
the congregation witnesses the miracle as the guardians open the heavenly gates to take Sister Anne and Lunea home . Sister Anne accomplishes her last lifetime task and is given the honor of Sainthood having miraculously saved Athena from the bullet by throwing herself in front of the bullet and healing her (with the help of Lunea ) in front of them just before she dies. Sister Anne and Lunea are buried together arm in arm at the top of an ancient Celtic hill having accomplished their sacred mission.
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Protagonist 2
LUNEA THUNDER a witchy healer, who is a rebellious Wiccan has come into this lifetime to complete her soul’s journey to help Sister Anne become a saint and return the Goddess to a place of honor

Opening Lunea Thunder along with Sister Anne are sent back to Earth by the Council of universal beings to help save humanity by making sure Sister anne accomplishes her lifetime task to become a saint. They travel through a time tunnel seeing flashes of lifetime after lifetime of each with a tragic ending sometimes by the hand of Father Sinclair in his many lifetimes with them

In the present Lunea is raising her niece Athena, whose parents were killed in Ukrainian. She has a New Age shop and is constantly being harassed.

Inciting Incident: She sees Sister Anne at the market and that night has horrific a dream remembering her purpose to help Sister Anne become a saint in this lifetime. She knows they must become friends and keeps it a secret that she knows most likely there will be a tragic ending.

Turning Point 1 Father Sinclair dies and Sister Anne visit’s Lunea’s New age shop. Together they seek advice from the Old woman shaman who tells them they must time travel together to find the ancient secret revealed in lifetimes before about the long lost Goddess .

Act 2:
Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: Lunea and Sister Anne become friends but Lunea having lost so much in her life can’t let anyone close and feels her eternal love for Sister Anne and the pain inevitable. The cruel hatred and discrimination begins to emerge in the village as they spray paint and intimidate Lunea and Athena naming them as evil.

Act 3:

Turning Point 3: To complicate things Lunea knows they are here for a purpose and both must find courage to steal the church’s cross and place it in the arms of the old stone monolithic goddess on the top of the hill
The evil slowly takes over and when the congregation discovers what they have done rage erupts. A teen believing he is doing the right thing shoots Lunea, Sister Anne and Athena.

Act 4

Climax:
Lunea’s hand is on Sister Anne’s hand that cover’s Athena’s wound and she helps Sister Anne miraculously heal Athena. The congregation witnesses the miracle as the guardians open to take Sister Anne and Lunea’s spirit home to the heavens knowing all is accomplished.

Resolution: A peek into the future we see Athena has carried on the sacred truths and is the new minister of the church..

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Eclipse Neilson supporting characters

VISION:I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

“What I learned from doing this assignment is I need more time to weave the pieces together but figuring out their purpose is so important.”

2. Tell us your supporting and background characters.

Supporting Characters:

ATHENA

FATHER SINCLAIR

THE OLD WOMAN

DAVID WHITEMAN

Background Characters:

Congregation,

Council of Universal Beings,

Crowds,

3. Focusing on those supporting characters, fill in the basic profile for each.

Support 1:

Name: FATHER SINCLAIR
Role: The minister of the church who becomes a ghost after the 1st act.
Main purpose: To make sure Sister Anne saves the church from closing down and the people from becoming lost souls.
Value: We get to see how Father Sinclair cares about Sister Anne and struggles with the rules he followed all his life as he seeks redemption now as a ghost.

Support 2:

Name: ATHENA (17)

Role: Lunea’s niece whose parents were killed in Ukraine ( I might change this to an inner city foster child)

Main purpose: To bring out the gentle mothering side of Lunea

Value: She believes there needs to be more kindness in the world and befriends the OLD ONE who will help Lunea and Sister Anne carry out their mission.Support 3:

Name: Old One (a native woman) (96)

Role: Helps guide Lunea in moments of doubt and is connected with the Council of Universal Beings.

Main purpose: To make sure the mission is accomplished helps them to time travel to find the secret.

Value: Strength and wisdom come to women of age.

Support 3:

Name: David Whiteman (17)

Role Athena’s schoolmate a trouble teen with possible psychosis and represents the problem with the town discrimination.

Main purpose: To make sure the miracle Sister Anne must perform happens by carrying out a shooting at the church.

Value: Witches are evil

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Eclipse Neilson Character Profiles Part 2

1. VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

2. With each of your lead characters, first tell us the following:

A.The High Concept.

A Nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a powerful Witchy Healer to achieve an ancient task – but all hell breaks out in the village in reaction to their love for each other.

B. This character’s journey. SISTER ANNE ( Protagonist 1)

From an obedient Nun, following the rules of her church into a woman emerging courageously as a caring leader, who happens to desire a true connection with her one and only friend.

This character’s journey. LUNEA THUNDER ( Protagonist 2)

she is there to help return the Goddess to a place of honor and at the same time help Sister Anne fulfill her destiny to become a saint.

C. The Actor Attractors for this character.

A nun destined to become a saint must follow her deep feelings and her sacred commitment to God as she sets herself free from the restrictions of her past and the church to help save the soul of humanity.

3. Brainstorm these profile components for each character.

7. Character Subtext:

SISTER ANNE
( Protagonist 1) Hiding something: Wanting to be free of the church rules so she can follow her heart.

LUNEA THUNDER ( Protagonist 2)
Hiding something: Her heart is broken and she is afraid to be vulnerable with Sister Anne knowing jt will break again if she follows her mission from the Council of The Universal Beings

8. Character Intrigue:

SISTER ANNE Competition: She is a nun finding her power as a leader in a male-oriented arena by remembering as a teen she was the top women’s soccer player in her school

LUNEA THUNDER
Hidden agendas A powerful woman who must secretly carry out her mission from the Council of Universal Beings even knowing it will break bother her and Sister Anne’s heart.

9. Flaw:

SISTER ANNE
Undervalues themselves: She struggles to be subservient and obey the rules of the church or break them and set herself free to be all she can be.

LUNEA THUNDER
Can’t look at their fears: She won’t let anyone help her by withdrawing into her sacred knowledge.

10. Values:

SISTER ANNE
Dedicated Love: Jesus is core to her heart and she won’t abandon his sacred teachings.

LUNEA THUNDER
Dedicated Love : The Goddess must be acknowledged as sacred in the world.

11. Internal Dilemma:

SISTER ANNE
Personal Love versus duty. Will she follow her heart’s quest of many lifetimes or her destiny in this lifetime to become a saint?

LUNEA THUNDER
Personal Love versus duty. Will she give up her heart’s healing to help save humanity.

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Eclipse Neilson Character Profiles Part 1

1. VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

“What I learned from doing this assignment is…?” Sometimes I need to sit trust the process and let the character emerge and have all begin to fall into place.

2. With each of your lead characters, first tell us the following:

A. The High Concept.

A Nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a powerful Witchy Healer to achieve an ancient task – but all hell breaks out in the village in reaction to their love for each other.

B. This character’s journey.. SISTER ANNE

From an obedient Nun, following the rules of her church into a woman emerging courageously as a caring leader, who happens to desire a true connection with her one and only friend.

C. The Actor Attractors for this character.

A nun destined to become a saint must follow her deep feelings and her sacred commitment to God as she sets herself free from the restrictions of her past and the church to help save the soul of humanity.

3. Brainstorm the first 6 parts of the profile for each of your lead characters.

Role in the Story: A nun left to save her falling apart church from closing after the minister dies, finds out she is destined to carry out a sacred task that will entail breaking the rules of her church and ultimately enrage her congregation. <div>

Age range and Description: In her 40’s small-bodied and inward, soft-spoken, sometimes fearful, and often looks down at the floor humbly but one gets a sense of her emerging power.

Core Traits: Kind, obedient, emotionally deep, secretly wants to reclaim her power and her voice as a warrior woman fighting discrimination.

Motivation; Want/Need: Wants to be free to follow Jesus’s teachings in her way which is not always abiding by the rules of Father Sinclair( protagonist) rules and guidance.

Wound: Is triggered by the hatred around her and relives the abuse by her father as a child. Hides remnants of her struggle with shame and suppressed anger at why God let that happen to her.

Likability, Relatability, Empathy . She longs for a friend and finds herself deeply bonding with Lunea Thunder. She is challenged to embrace courage and speak truth to power when the village becomes outraged at their friendship.

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B. This character’s journey. LUNEA THUNDER

A powerful witchy healer sent by the The Council of Universal Beings must become vulnerable and face her deep wound as she follows her mission to help save humanity and her soulmate a Nun.

C. The Actor Attractors for this character.

A witchy healer with a powerful priestess presence who dares to break the boundaries of society believing she holds a sacred truth that must be delivered to humanity.

3. Brainstorm the first 6 parts of the profile for each of your lead characters.

Role in the Story: A Witchy healer sent by The Council of Universal Beings must help a Nun who happens to be her twin flame/ soulmate become a saint.

Age range and Description: In her late 40’s- early 50’s a strong rebellious demeanor, warrior-like, and dresses with a pagan priestess flare. Presents herself as a wise leader.

Core Traits: Kind, powerful female, emotionally deep, secretly vulnerable uses her brilliant mind and knowledge to compensate.
Motivation; Want/Need: Wants to belong and be honored for her kind heart and sense of integrity.

Wound: Is triggered by the hatred around her and relives the abuse and loneliness of her childhood.

Likability, Relatability, Empathy. She loves all of nature and the wounded ones in the world.

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Eclipse Neilson Likability/Relatability/Empathy

1. VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

What I learned -was that I needed to give more empathy to the antagonist in this script.

2. Brainstorm one or more ways you can present your Protagonist through each of these:

SISTER ANNE (Protagonist 1)

Likability: Kind,Sweet, Humble trying hard to be a good nun.
Relatability: disrespected by men as a woman being strong in a quiet kind way. ( a typical feminist journey into power)
Empathy: She has sacrificed a great deal and blames herself for the abuse her father inflicted – a wounded healer theme.

LUNEA THUNDER (Protagonist 2)

Likability: She saves every bee, ant and wounded bird with extraordinary kindness. Befriends the homeless with deep compassion.
She is a woman who stands in her power and stands up for the vulnerable.
Tries to be more normal in her witchy ways to protect her daughter from bullying from the other students.
Tries to be a good single Mom.

Relatability: Sometimes worries about her daughter’s wellbeing like all caring mothers,
Free and herself when alone and in nature almost childlike.

Empathy: The fear of losing her daughter or experiencing her own powerlessness against the cruelty of society is heartbreaking.

3. Just to get the experience, give us one or more ways that your Antagonist could be presented through each of these:

FATHER SINCLAIR (Antagonist )

Likability: He is trying to be a good minister
Even in his stern unwavering moments, we feel he cares about Sister Anne and ultimately gives her the power to run the church after he dies. This demonstrates he is willing to break the church rules for his people’s wellbeing.
When he becomes a ghost we see his struggle to be a good by-the-book minister haunting Sister Anne and we never really know if he is haunting her or being a protective guardian.

Relatability: He loves his old dog that he rescued years before. His relationship with his dog shows the most human side of him.

Empathy: As he is dying he is feeling that he has failed to save his church and is desperate to find forgiveness in some way.

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Eclipse Neilson -Character Intrigue

VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

1. “What I learned from doing this assignment is…?”This was the hardest one yet for me. Because I had to see the difference between subtext and agendas’. I am not sure yet if these work for me but at least it is a start.

2. For each of your main characters, use this list to brainstorm one or more Intrigue items that might apply.

Character Name: SISTER ANNE

Role: A nun left to save her church from closing after the minister died.
Unspoken Wound: Abused by her father as a child and hides remnants of her anger at why God let that happen.
Secrets Is falling in love with Lunea Thunder the priestess/witch
Competition – dreams of winning against the sexist men around her in the same way she was a teen soccer player.

3. Give us an idea of how that character’s subtext might show up in your movie.

Secrets – Her looks and dialog with God. The way she handles the sexist men and when she slightly switches into her slightly competitive side as she takes more of a role in the sermons and leadership of the church. Leading the way for her congregation to find new ground( like a center-lead soccer player.)

Competition traits – When alone and upset she hugs an old soccer ball as if it were herself. She watches soccer. She uses soccer moves metaphorically.
She confesses to Lunea that her father abused her so badly the night before her biggest game she never got to play it.
Secret Identity: it will be revealed near the end that Sister Anne is the Holy Mother sent by The Counsel of Universal Beings.

2 LUNEA THUNDER

Role: The town’s witch/ priestess who has a new age shop.

Hidden agendas: Hides that she is there to help return the Goddess to a place of honor and at the same time help Sister Anne fulfill her destiny to become a saint.

Secrets: / Unspoken Wound: Hides her vulnerability and fear of personal relationships after being an abandoned child at a very young age.

3. Give us an idea of how that character’s subtext might show up in your movie.

She won’t let Sister Anne give up. Encourages her to be brave and return to a playful side.

She heals her childhood vulnerability as being an orphan by being a proud single Mom and makes sure her daughter is strong.

She slowly trusts Sister Anne as a friend.

Secret Identity: it will be revealed near the end that Lunea Thunder is the Goddess sent by The Counsel of Universal Beings.

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Eclipse Neilson Subtext Characters

VISION:I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my new genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

“What I learned from doing this assignment is by using the process of letting this story come to me as I follow the assignments is fun and at the same time creates possible changes in the story. This is a great exercise when your remain open to the “getting to know you” approach with your characters.

Movie Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Activity: The subtext of my lead characters.

Character Name: SISTER ANNE

Subtext Identity: Needing to speak truth to power. A rebel waiting to be set free. Perhaps falling in love with Lunea.

Subtext Trait: silent obedience, hides her past abuse and how it robbed her of any sense of self-worth – hides her desire to rebel and lead with her truth.

Subtext Logline: A shy subservient, very kind Nun must overcome her sense of powerlessness and embrace her mission to become a leader for the parish as she fights the hatred that is taking over her town which is a horrific reminder of her abusive childhood.

Possible Areas of Subtext:

Is completely subservient to Father Sinclair and others. Sees abusive unloving behavior to a child and needs to stand up to the parent but struggles. Prays to Jesus for help and begins to uses a lot of “what ifs?” As she dialogs with Him.

Befriends Lunea even knowing Father Sinclair had made negative comments about her before he died.

She is able to share her childhood success as the leader of her soccer team -a hint at her strength as a young girl that was destroyed with her father’s abuse and death leaving her an orphan. ( the soccer game will be a symbolic tool for her inner rebel through out the film)

When she and Father Sinclair’s Ghost have healing she begins to step into her power.

Because I love subtext, there will be a lot of subtext in the themes with her daily ritual in the church as she evolves.

Character Name: LUNEA

Subtext Identity: She doesn’t feel she belongs and is afraid to show her vulnerability with others.

Subtext Trait: She compensates her vulnerability by always staying strong and warrior-like. Whenever overwhelmed she returns to be focused as a seeker of mystical answers.

Subtext Logline: A powerful witchy priestess dedicated to her sacred mission never lets anyone get too close because she fears they will abandon her and yet she must let her Soul Love – Sister Anne become her closes friend to complete this life’s times mission.

Possible Areas of Subtext:

When she begins to bond with Sister Anne she withdraws.

She has one photo of her mother she often connects with.

Comfortable in leadership roles where she is the witchy leader and people are seeking her advice and help but she never reaches out to others.

Shows up in the opening as they move through the tunnel of time and experience all the times they left each other. Her facial expressions show the increased pain.

Her daughter’s love for her helps heal the wound but even then we see her struggle from her childhood wounds and so many of her lifetimes before.

Always covers up her vulnerability and worries by trying to teach her daughter to be fearless when she is bullied.

She acts as if she doesn’t care that the town rejects her and sees her as evil but it triggers her back into the hell she went through lifetime after life time.

Often she will use sister Anne’s feelings to express her own.

Both Sister Anne’s and Lunea’s subtexts reflect and play off of each other throughout the script.

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Eclipse Neilson – Actor attractors!

LUNEA THUNDER( protagonist1)

VISION:

I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

“What I learned from doing this assignment is that I am getting the essence of the lead characters, making them attractive to actors who want a wide range of emotions. I find myself changing some of the structure’s story as I go along. It is like solving a puzzle- one character at a time.

1.What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?

Lunea is a witchy healer with a powerful priestess presence. She dares to break the boundaries of society believing she holds a sacred truth that must be delivered and yet knows it will break her heart to follow her mission.

2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?

She was sent by the Council of the Universe on a mission; is a wounded healer who stands in the depth of her heart and fearlessly becomes a seeker of truth using all her historical and psychic knowledge to find the sacred answers lost in time.

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead could take in the script?

Uses her Priestess powers to time travel. Is being guided by the variety of spirits of the Council of the Universe. Does everything he can to help her Soul sister – a nun, Sister Anne who is destined to become a saint and at the same time is a caring mother trying to raise a daughter to become a powerful young woman.

4. How can you introduce this role in a way that could sell it to an actor?

Lunea Thunder is a powerful character determined to empower women and help fight discrimination in these times through her actions, words, and expression of deep feelings while being guided by the Council of the Universe.

5. What could be this character’s emotional range

Full range – fearless/fearful, empathetic/ enraged, leader qualities/ playful, deep emotions – passionate, and calmly wise/motherly.

6. What subtext can the actor play?

She knows someone’s heart is going to break in the end of her destined mission and struggles to find a different ending. She must feel all the painful lifetimes before so as to find her courage and commitment to help humanity. She hides her deep grief of never feeling she belongs and must learn to receive and trust vulnerable love, especially from Sister Anne.

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character can have?

Her closest bond is with Sister Anne, whose love for Jesus is destined to intertwine reverently with Luna’s love for the Goddess. Together they become a healing force to fight the hatred that is emerging within the townspeople.

8. How will this character’s unique voice be presented?

Fierce yet compassionate, committed to integrity, and brilliantly discovering the interconnections of sacred truths between waring religions.

9. What could make this character special and unique?

She is a Priestess / Witch but has a saintly quality to her.

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SISTER ANNE (protagonist 2)

1. What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?

Sister Anne is an emerging in her power nun dedicated to her love for Jesus who must fulfill her destiny to become a saint.

2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?

She was sent by the Council of the Universe on a mission. She is gentle, kind, deeply wounded from her abusive childhood, and must step out of her comfort zone and break a few rules of her church to take on her power as a leader.

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead could take in the script?

Seek help from her Soul Sister- a priestess witch who has psychic skills and tools to time travel with her to find her courage and purpose.

4. How can you introduce this role in a way that could sell it to an actor?

A gentle wounded woman healing from her childhood into her powerful self to fulfill her destiny to become a saint.

5. What could be this character’s emotional range

Suppressed feelings, loving, empathetic, gentle, fearful, and obedient . She must discover playfulness, trust and a passion for life.

6. What subtext can the actor play?

She secretly has always wanted to be a rebel. Has fallen in love and must struggle with her profound feelings for Lunea. Accepts her journey to become a saint.

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character can have?

Sister Anne’s relationship with Lunea Thunder the town’s Witchy priestess who will force her to dare to be different and dare to become a leader in her parish.

8. How will this character’s unique voice be presented?

Her gentle yet powerful passion for the Bible – especially Jesus’s teachings leads her to find courage to speak her truth .

9. What could make this character special and unique?

A humble withdrawn nun destined to become a saint leads a close-minded parish to help return the Goddess of their ancestors to the heart of humanity.

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Eclipse Neilson Actor attractors for THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Movie: GIRL INTERRUPTED and CONTACT

VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

“What I learned from doing this assignment is I loved this exercise it totally inspired me and reminded me why I want to write. Also, it showed me how I could write a Sci-fi and keep it totally dramatic and inspirational. I have found two great characters to help guide me in this new task.

1. For the Nun

Genre: Drama – GIRL INTERRUPTED

Lead Character Name: Susanna (Winona Ryder) (for protagonist #1 the NUN character in my script)

Also Lisa the rebellious patient (Angeline Jolie) (for protagonist #2 the WITCH character in my script combined with Eleanor Arroway ( Jodie Foster) in CONTACT )

1.Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role?

A profound character that addresses so many emotional and political issues of the time and still even now. In her own way shows care for the other patients as she bonds with them while trying to find herself.

2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie?

The rebel versus victim character’s arc. She becomes a hero and has enormous subtext. Demonstrates deep emotional transitions with facial expressions and subtext actions. Experiences situations where she must sacrifice all to get better. (eg. When her boyfriend wants her to escape to Canada and she chooses to accept her reality to get better on her terms a theme that goes throughout the story.)

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie?

Builds empathy, and such deep silent despair (all expressed in facial looks ) The introduction says it all – lets us know the why and what was going on- introduces the title – Girl interrupted – she has just attempted suicide. Ironically at the turning point, she experiences a hard reality of a friend killing herself. This becomes the catalyst for the beginning of her own healing and taking charge of her life.

4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor?

Able to express so much through her responses to the world around her. Lots of “ in-the-moment” subtext expressions ranging from cool, detached, gentle, afraid angry, and fiercely compassionate. A character who doesn’t want to feel and yet must to grow into her powerful self through her feelings.

All facial and simple questions have deep meaning to her complex character. (Eg symbolic subtext- holds a burnt down cigarette- ashes still perfectly balanced like a column – while trembling inside .

5. What is this character’s emotional range?

Wide range! All the emotions! Vulnerable to anger to moments of freedom and then gaining control of her life.

6. What subtext can the actor play?

All of what is suppressed in her! Her subtext speaks to sexism, society the lack of humanness in the psychological/medical world during the 60’s and is still relative. Her subtext is that she is on the path to becoming a powerful independent woman healing from a deep depression.

Most of the script is subtext.

Emotional pain, feelings of loss, anger, despair, then emerges slowly as a woman with a dream to become a writer.

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character has?

With the rebel patient ( Angeline Jolie) who helps her discover her inner rebel in a deeper way and Whoopie Goldberg as the nurse, who believes in her and uses tough love.

8. How is this character’s unique voice presented?

Sees the world through her facial expressions. Slow emerging power with suppressed anger and vulnerability and broken innocence.

Profound intelligent, deep, deep insights into life, oppressed by upper-class society’s expectations, mental illness and one girl trying to find her way.

When she befriends the rebel in the hospital and must finally accept she is truly crazy and harsh when out of control, we see the emergence of a strong character.

9. What makes this character special and unique?

Through everything that happens, she never loses empathy.

10. (Fill in a scene that shows the character fulfilling much of the Actor Attractor model.)

Protagonist 2

Genre: Sci-Fi /Drama-

CONTACT

Eleanor Arroway- (Jodie Foster )

1. Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role?

Eleanor demonstrates the brilliant scientist mind of a strong woman filled with vision and the emotional ability to take in new concepts must fight with everything she has to carry out her lifetime dream trying to be squashed by the sexist establishment , government’s authorities and religious right.

2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie?

She is the Seeker of truth, a powerful woman and represents humans to the universe

3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie?

Never stops exploring with curiosity and emotional subtext fights sexism and nonbelievers and struggles to be a spiritual.

4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor?

Powerful woman standing in her truth, Carries wounded childhood, and is willing to take risks against the establishment and fight for intelligence.

5. What is this character’s emotional range?

From a curious scientific-analytical mind to emotional-filled spiritual awareness and fighting for a dream.

6. What subtext can the actor play?

1. Her deep loss of her father when she was nine. He believed in her and taught her passion for star research. In some ways his death is the loss of her faith and yet the foundation of her faith.

She is a women trying to establish her in a sexist society.

Must prove she is not crazy and fight sexism.

7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character has?

With her boyfriend a writer, who has a divinity background and is a dreamer and cares for her.

8. How is this character’s unique voice presented?

A fighter for knowledge, persistence courage, a representative of humanity as she battles and seeks understanding of the universe.

9. What makes this character special and unique?

She is a scientist embodying integrity and embracing a spiritual reality versus a religious one. She is not valued by her peers but she fights all to be who she is – a woman with a vision wanting to travel to the stars to represent humanity.

10. (Fill in a scene that shows the character fulfilling much of the Actor Attractor model.)

When she arrives through the wormhole and sees, feels, and experiences beauty – the heavens in a visceral way. Her scientific understanding, the child-like innocence, her brilliant mind, and a newfound spiritual understanding as her father’s image speaks to her – and gives her a profound message from the aliens.

2

She is at a hearing defending her findings. The that is trying to make her look delusional and she courageously, powerfully, and emotionally delivers a monologue that is core to her character arc – from scientific – to emotional to another form of spiritual awareness. She risks it all but with extraordinary integrity stays true to herself and her passion. Two Powerful scenes like many in this film!

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Genre Conventions

1. VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

2. WHAT I ‘VE LEARNED: To go for more Sci -FI and to keep in mind what the audience will expect. <div>

3. TITLE: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

4. Genre: SCI -FI / DRAMA
5. CONCEPT: Sent on a mission by The Council Of Universal Beings an introverted Nun, destined to become a saint, bonds with a powerful Witchy Healer to achieve an ancient task to save the heart flame of humanity.

6. Genre:Conventions SCI-FI / DRAMA

SCI -FI: PURPOSE: ​ To cause us to think outside of our own world.

FANTASTIC WORLDS: ​

INCREDIBLE VISUALS: ​

SOCIAL COMMENTARY: ​

DRAMA: PURPOSE: ​ To explore stories with emotional and interpersonal high stakes for their characters.

CHARACTER-DRIVEN JOURNEY:

HIGH STAKES COME FROM WITHIN: ​EMOTIONALLY RESONATES: ​

CHALLENGING, EMOTIONALLY-CHARGED SITUATIONS: ​

REAL-LIFE SITUATIONS: ​ Drama stories are grounded in reality.

7. STRUCTURE WITH CHANGES :

ACT I

Opening:

Takes place in the starry heavens of eternity.

A star explodes and forms two flaming meteorites spiraling toward earth.

Silence and echoing voices and coded beeps in the universe.

Two silhouettes of cloaked souls (Lunea and Anne ) leaning side by side lovingly gazing at the heavens. The Council of the Universal Beings appear and sends them on a mission to help save the (sacred flame) of humanity from being extinguished.

(Lunea and Anne ) souls move through a time tunnel. Flashes of their love and tragic endings of each of their many lives together appear. With each lifetime a star appears in the universe forming their personal star constellation.

They begin with their Egyptian lifetime – where they drank poison to rest peacefully in each other’s arms in all eternity together.

They continue to flash through life times that are relevant to the story and mission

Their life before the present one is in 1930s when they are female archeologists. They discover their ancient grave but quickly rebury it realizing it must be kept a sacred secret.

They arrive at the closed Door of Remembering and slip through to their present life. The door slams behind them. All memories are gone.

The first image is on a hill above a church in a small town. It has a female-stone henge type statue. The two flaming meteorites lay at her feet.

In the present: Lunea and Anne’s lives are opposite –

Lunea is a witchy priestess trying to set up a new age shop and raise a young daughter as a single parent.

Anne is an obedient nun serving a domineering minister who is trying to keep an ailing congregation from falling apart.

Lunea and Sister Anne get to know each other and slowly build a secret bond, yet both are cautious and doubtful they can ever become the best of friends out in the world.

Inciting Incident:

Father Sinclair dies leaving Sister Anne to carry on, knowing the church will close if she fails. She must take his place as a minister.

Turning Point:

Father Sinclair returns as a ghost seeking redemption and begins to haunt her warning her that evil forces are taking over the town.

Lost and overwhelmed Sister Anne seeks help from Priestess Lunea knowing she will understand what to do with the hauntings and help banish the evil. They realize as they become closer, that they must join heart flames to fight what is emerging in the town.

The Council of the Universal Beings responds and sends an Ancient female guardian – The OLD ONE to guide them as they set out to fight the hatred, bigotry, and falsehoods that is taking over.

ACT 2:

The Old One sends Lunea and Sister Anne through the Door of Remembering with the task to find in their past lives clues that appear as flashes and symbols for them to return to the present with as healing tools for all. (They find a profound secret from the burning times when they both were burned as witches. They return with the Flaming Sword.

Midpoint Turning Point:

The Old One performs a powerful ceremony- “The fusing of the souls between Lunea and Anne to fight evil with the sword. They commit to never betray each other – no matter what.

ACT 3:

Rethink everything:

The people in the town discover that their Nun and the Witch are secretly friends and begin to attack Lunea and her daughter Athena. She is rejected and bullied in school. The town’s hatred grows against all of them. This forces Anne to stand in her power speak her heartfelt truth and carry out the mission Father Sinclair was never able to do.

Father Sinclair and Sister Anne have a breakthrough moment and he gives her his diary -where he struggled as a preacher and the truths he discovered but kept secret. She begins to use his words.

New plan:

The Old One and Father Sinclair instruct Lunea to join the church. One Sunday Sister Anne asks Lunea to share her understanding of the sacred text. The congregation walks out enraged.

Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift.

Lunea and Anne one night steal the church’s crucifix and carry it ceremoniously up the hill to the stone statue that strangely looks more and morel like the open arms of Mother Mary. They place the crucifix in her arms.

The congregation finds out. Enraged they seek Anne and Lunea out. There is a shooting on the steps of the church. Both Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne take the bullet first while trying to protect Athena. But all are shot.

ACT 4:

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:

It looks like a miracle because Athena’s bullet wound is healed by both Lunea’s and Sister Anne’s hands in front of everyone just before they collapse and die. The townspeople witness the miracle. They never really know who did the healing of Athena – But the spirits of the heavens appear at that moment as Star Beings, Angels, and cloaked Ancients from the Universal Council of Beings. The townspeople have an awakening.

They carry one large casket up the hill. Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne are buried together on the hill (their favorite place.)

Time tunnel appears again. We move forward to the door of the Future. It opens slightly and we see an image of Athena (Lunea’s daughter ) at the pulpit as the new preacher of the church.

The last image is a gravestone inscribed – Here rest Priestess Lunea and Saint Anne side by side. Heart by heart – Soul by soul for all eternity.

The door of time closes once again.

In the dark tunnel of remembering, a flame is lit and we see the original burial of the two Egyptian skeletons that the two female archeologists had discovered 1930’s and secretly covered back up. But now between them is the flaming sword.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson 4 Act Transformational Structure

VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

WHAT I ‘VE LEARNED: I am letting this story unfold and at times it is hard and I remind myself I can all change it if and when needed. There might be more detail than I need right now but it helps me stay in the flow of this story.

TITLE: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: Inspirational / Drama

Dramatic / Buddy

Concept: An introverted Nun, destined to become a saint, bonds with a powerful Witchy Healer to achieve an ancient task – but all hell breaks out in the village in reaction to their love for each other.

Main Conflict: Two deeply spiritual women from opposite ends of the spectrum – one a Christian and the other Neo-pagan must overcome their own discrimination to join forces to fight the hatred and relentless bigotry taking over the town.

Old Ways: Priestess Lunea
Fiercely independent
trusting none –
does not really believe she is lovable (except by her 13-year-old daughter)
Deeply connected to earth-based traditions and her warrior spirit.
New ways:
Standing as a gentle leader and protector of all.
Accepts she is lovable and lets others see her deepest vulnerabilities,
Expresses her deep love for Sister Anne.

Old Ways: Sister Anne:

Mostly trapped in her subservience and haunted past.
Never speaks up or stands up to people.
Lost how to be playful humor.
Humble with fear but pure of heart.
New ways:
Standing as a gentle strong leader, a fierce protector of all the young and vulnerable, and feels like a free woman.

Old Ways: (antagonists) Priestess Lunea and Sister Anna think the other needs to learn the real meaning of the almighty to save themselves and humanity.

New Ways: Lunea and Sister Anna learn to love and respect each other’s belief and join forces to fight the true evil of humanity – hatred

Act 1:

Opening: Takes place in the starry heavens of eternity. Two silhouettes of cloaked souls (Lunea and Anne ) are sent back by the council of the universe to help save the heart of humanity from being lost forever.

Their souls move through a dark time tunnel. Flashes of the tragic endings of each of their many lives together. Beginning in an Egypt tomb where they both drink poison together and lay side by side in rest smiling. Further down the time tunnel in the (1930s) two female archeologists discover the grave but quickly rebury it realizing it must be kept a secret.

They arrive at the closed iron “Door of the Remembering”. It creaks open to the present where the two souls’ lives are now in opposite places – one being a witchy priestess trying to set up a new age shop and raise a young daughter (Athena) as a single parent. The other – is an obedient Nun caring for her beloved, ailing minister Father Sinclair and at the same time is trying to help hold together a congregation from falling into the hatred and discrimination that is emerging throughout the country.

Inciting Incident Father Sinclair ( mentor (1) ) dies leaving everything for Sister Anne to carry on. But he haunts her as a ghost wanting her to return to the essence of the ancient teachings of Jesus, warning her that an evil force is taking over the town and the planet and their church. He admits he has failed and needs her help.

Turning Point– Sister Anne heartbroken over the loss of Father Sinclair, turns to her new friend/confidant Priestess Lunea for guidance, knowing she will understand the strange hauntings by Father Sinclair. They realize they must join forces to fight the evil emerging in the town.

Act 2:

New Plan: Lunea’s spirit guide The Old One ( mentor 2) joins Father Sinclair (mentor 1) and both from the other realm guide the two women to identify the sources of evil.

Plan in action: With help of the Old One they both time travel to their past lives to find the clues they need to banish the evil. On one journey they discover a profound secret from the burning times when they both were burned as witches.

Midpoint Turning Point: The Old One performs a powerful ancient ceremony- the fusing of the souls between Lunea and Anne to fight evil. They commit to never betray each other – no matter what.

Act 3:

Rethink everything: The people in the village realize that their Nun and the Witch are friends and begin to attack Lunea and her daughter Athena. She is rejected and bullied in school. The town’s hatred grows against all of them. This forces Anne to stand in her power speak her heartfelt truth and carry out the mission Father Sinclair was never able to do.

New plan: The Old One and Father Sinclair instruct Lunea to join the church. One Sunday Sister Anne asks Lunea to share her understanding of the sacred text. The congregation walks out enraged.

Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift.

Lunea and Anne one night steal the church’s crucifix and carry bring it ceremoniously up the hill to stand in the arms of an ancient statue of the Mother Goddess (perhaps Mother Mary.)

The congregation finds out. Enraged they seek Anne and Lunea out. There is a shooting on the steps of the church. Both Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne take the bullet first while trying to protect Athena. But all are shot.

Act 4:

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict.

It looks like a miracle because Athena’s bullet wound is healed by both Lunea’s and Sister Anne’s hands in front of everyone just before they collapse and die. The townspeople witness the miracle. They never really know who did the healing of Athena – But the spirits of the heavens appear at that moment as Angels and cloaked Ancients. The townspeople have an awakening.

They carry one large casket up the hill. Priestess Lunea and Sister Anne are buried together on the hill (their favorite place.)

Time tunnel appears again. We move forward to the door of the Future. It opens slightly and we see an image of Athena (Lunea’s daughter ) at the pulpit as the new preacher of the church.

The last image is a gravestone inscribed – Here rest Priestess Lunea and Saint Anne side by side. Heart by heart – Soul by soul for all eternity.

The door of time closes once again.

In the dark, a flame is lit and we see the original burial of the two Egyptian skeletons that the two female archeologists had discovered and secretly recovered.

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Eclipse Neilson -Subtext Plot

VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

WHAT I VE LEARNED: is that my characters are often deep and complicated and have a lot of subtext as motivation. It will be fun to see how it all gets acted out as I slowly let the story evolve.

The Nun and The Witch

Dramatic / Triangle

Genre: (fantasy)/ inspirational drama )

High Concept: A dedicated Nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a Witchy healer to achieve a sacred ancient task to heal humanity- but all hell breaks out in the town.

Major Story Hook: Sent by the council of the Universal Light Beings, two powerful women, a nun, and a witch join forces to heal a centuries-long battle in a small town that has been taken over by evil forces reflective of the world at large.

Subtext Plot:Layering:

Both Lunea and Sister Karina have a series of past lives that will be reflected in their present relationship and set of circumstances.

So what seems a simple statement or action will be loaded with images of past life unresolved memories.

Also both have had childhoods that have created opposite reactions in them. Lunea is defensive strong don’t mess with me type of woman and sister Karina is silent humble and subservient but both harbor an unresolved rage that must be harnessed for the good of all.

There we be also a layer on how sacred teachings in having been misused or abused. Through their friendship they will unravel sacred truths common to all traditions and will be found in their past lives.

1. They have a familiar feeling of knowing each other before.

2. They are not supposed to like each other

3. They must find the courage to get to know each other

4. They must unravel a puzzle from a dream they both have one night.

5. They both have pushback from their spiritual circles.

6. They both must heal their tragic relationships from past lives.

7. They both must share their childhood tragic secrets- in each other but first must learn to trust another human being.

8. They both must dare to time travel to the past and the future.

9. Both must fight the Ghost of Father Sinclair and the evil that has irrupted in the town.

Subtext Plot: Someone hides who they are

It takes Sister Karina longer to reveal she had always dreamed of being a priestess and for Lunea to reveal as a child and sometimes as an adult she would dream of laying in the arms of Mother Mary and had always felt she was not pure enough to become a nun because she had been a prostitute for a short while to survive.

Subtext Plot: Fish out of water

Both Lunea and Sister Anne go to each other’s ceremonies under disguise. Lunea becomes a churchgoer until she is cast out by the congregation and Sister Anne step by step studies the ancient Egyptian and Greek myths. Both feel and act awkwardly in the beginning until each tradition begins to speak to them.

Subtext Plot: Competitive agendas

Both women feel they have the right and only answer and spend time trying to outsmart each other until they follow their hearts.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson

VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

WHAT I ‘VE LEARNED: I am letting this story unfold at the moment with some surprises appearing and I am seeing how the two protagonists are connected and reflective of each other and also that my “activist spirit” just won’t give me a break and write something easy. LOL

TITLE: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: Inspirational / Fantasy

Dramatic / Triangle

Concept:

An introverted Nun, destined to become a saint, bonds with a powerful Witchy Healer to achieve an ancient task – but all hell breaks out in the village in reaction to their love for each other.

LUNEA THUNDER

Arc Beginning:

Begins a new life in a small village hoping to belong and be loved for who she is but discovers she is demonized as she attempts to carry out an ancient sacred task.

Arc Ending:

Feels loved, honored, connected, and truly visible in her success in achieving her sacred task to stand side by side with her beloved friend and healer Sister Karina.

Internal Journey:

Powerful but vulnerable,

angry,

deeply wounded,

a loner who has never let someone love her

must learn to be willing to reach out for help.

External Journey:

She sets up a new age shop in a mostly close-minded village and bonds with an introverted nun who needs her psychic help and love in holding together a falling apart congregation reeling from the death of their overbearing minister.

Old Ways:

Fiercely independent

trusting none –

does not really believe she is lovable (except by her 13-year-old daughter)

Deeply connected to earth-based traditions and her warrior spirit.

New ways:

Standing as a gentle leader and protector of all.

Accepts she is lovable and lets others see her deepest vulnerabilities,

Expresses her deep love for Sister Karina.

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SISTER KARINA

Arc Beginning:

Has spent years as a silent dedicated Nun serving a domineering somewhat misogynist minister whose church has long lost its purity and its funding.

Arc Ending:

Feels loved, honored, connected, and truly visible as a leader. Feels successful in achieving her ancient sacred task as she stands side by side with her beloved friend and healer Lunea Thunder.

Internal Journey:

Deeply wounded from an abusive childhood

Strives to be a good nun but feels invisible

Feels something undefinable is missing in her soul.

Feels trapped at times maybe even angry.

External Journey:

Sister Karina must step in after the overbearing old minister dies leaving no plans on how to keep her beloved church-going while being haunted by him. She starts to realize how much damage and discrimination is emerging in their hearts and she must learn to stand in her power to heal the evil that festers among the townspeople.

Old Ways:

Mostly trapped in her subservience and haunted past. Never speaks up or stands up to people. Lost how to be playful humor. Humble with fear but pure of heart.

New ways:

Standing as a gentle strong leader, a fierce protector of all the young and vulnerable, and feels like a free woman.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

ECLIPSE NEILSON

VISION: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

WHAT I VE LEARNED: Coming into this project mostly with a blank slate gives me enormous freedom to play around with ideas.

TITLE: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Dramatic / Triangle or ( buddy movie)

CONCEPT

: A dedicated Nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a Witchy healer to achieve a sacred ancient task to heal humanity- but all hell breaks out in the village.

LUNEA THUNDER ( protagonist1)- A committed witchy healer with a powerful presence destined to break boundaries.

Unique Character: She hides her deep grief of never feeling she belongs.

SISTER ANNE – (protagonist 2) A humble nun serves the overbearing cruel minister of a falling apart church.

Unique character: A nun who yearns to become a powerful leader of her church.

FATHER SINCLAIR (antagonist) – A man who feels he needs to control Sister Anne’s and Lunea’s relationship in the same way he controlled the congregation by being unwavering in his beliefs.

Unique: He becomes a ghost early in the story.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson

Vision: I want to be a great award-winning writer, known for my genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place.

What I’ve learned is this is important to be as clear as possible especially if the script has a great deal of subtext.

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: Sci-Fi (fantasy)/ drama )

High Concept: A dedicated Nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a Witchy healer to achieve a sacred ancient task to heal humanity- but all hell breaks out in the village.

Major Story Hook: Sent by the council of the Universal Light Beings, two powerful souls, a nun, and a witch join forces to heal a centuries-long battle in a small village that has been taken over by evil forces reflective of the world at large.

Character Structure Drama/triangle or a Buddy

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[Eclipse Neilson]

Hi Everyone,

My name is Eclipse and I am an optioned screenwriter, and an award-winning author and have four full feature scripts written.

I am dedicated to writing scripts that address causes in the world that might help make the world a better place for all including animals. My favorite genres are drama, fantasy/ magical realism, and inspirational.

My goal is to write the best script I have ever written to stir people’s hearts.

I have worked in a variety of fields in my life – ranging from spirit leader in eco-feminist spirituality to developing bully prevention & environmental programs through the arts for inner-city children to flipping houses in the 1970s.

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Margaret what a funny scene and such great set up. genius idea. It is one of those scenes you remember and talk about once you are out of the theater. I have no suggestion cause it seems just perfect to me!

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Eclipse Neilson Day 11

What I’ve learned is the skill sheet and all the techniques increased my scene. I have been working on this script with group senior friend for the last few months and I can’t wait to share this one! The Topper “yumm” shows up in an earlier scene. This scene is three quarter through the script and is new one I wrote with the class. I love feed back and will love to exchange with all who want. I should let you know this is my first comedy though.

INCONGRUENCE

The main incongruence is the women are seniors age range 75-97. All but Radna know anything about metaphysical or supernatural experiences but are willing to go along. They are about to begin an adventure to find buried gold that a ghost has told Radna in a earlier scene about .The ghost said they must use pendulums . They just recently bought pendulums in a New Age shop.(another funny scene)

CHARACTER LOGLINES:

RADNA (80) a sophisticated free spirited hippie with a stern rebellious approach to life, has a flare for the supernatural and has taken the role to teach the residents her skills.

ANNE (97) wheelchair bound, hunched over, chin on her chest type of senior.She is a women of few words but when she speaks its to the point and has a bite to it.

SILVIA (78) eats when she is nervous – a bit of a fearful clown and the supernatural challenges her spiritual belief system though she tries to make nothing of it.

JEANIE (75) is gay has a Unitarian way of understanding the world but mostly keeps to herself.

TILDA (75) was raised a gypsy, talks too much, is a people pleaser and knows she needs to stand up for herself.Likes to be the group comic.

MARTHA once a successful business woman who never took a break, trusts no one and has little patience but now must simply learn to be one of the gals.

SET UP:

The women are gathering as planned to go out into the garden and dowse for gold in the dark of night when everyone else sleeps. (Including the attendants)

Title: WHEN THE NIGHT CHILD DANCES (DRAMA /COMEDY)

INT.LIVING ROOM – NIGHT

The women sit around the coffee table. A big table lit chandelier sits in the center.

The women are in night gowns and raincoats. Each has a flashlight and their crystal pendulum. They are all wearing one of Radna’s collection of colorful hats. Some don’t fit.

Anne sits in her wheel chair next Jeanie. Her hat droops over her nose when she rest her chin on her chest. She tosses it on the floor frustrated.

Martha on her phone rushes in. She is wearing a sexy short negligee. They all raise their eyebrows shocked. Martha sees their expression.

MARTHA

Gotta go. Bye.

TILDA

Oh la la.

RADNA

Are you kidding me?

Martha flashes her negligee, pulls out her crystal pendulum and struts across the room as if she was on stage in a fashion show. Jeanie leans over to Silvia and whispers.

JEANIE

There’s always one in every crowd.

Annie looks up from her wheelchair stares at Martha up and down, pauses and ask with a straight face.

ANNE

Where’s your boobs?

Everyone laughs. Martha is not sure she thinks its funny sits down next to Tilda. Tilda pats her knee.

TILDA

You’re lucky they are so small. Look at mine.

Shows her boobs.

RADNA

Sandbags I drag around.

SILVIA

Me too.

The women giggle.

Radna busily sketches out a map ignores the conversation. They wait for Radna to give instructions.

They get bored.

Martha blinks her flashlight. Jeanie blinks back with hers. Soon everyone is playing blink, blink with them. They giggle and get into it and begin to blink in rhythm.

Tilda stands up starts a rap sound – a shaboom beatbox and pretends she is holding a mike as she blinks her light. She turns and looks at the women. No one joins in.

TILDA

Aha…lets try … Bomp, bomp …Who put the bomp in the bomp shush bomp bomp.

The group joins in.They stand up and pretend to do the Bomp dance.

Radna looks up from her map. Yells out.

RADNA

Ok, who smoked the dope?

Tilda starts a new rap.

TILDA

Who smoked the dope? Bomp Bomp

The other women join in giggle and stare at Radna defiantly.

Anne sits in the wheelchair with her hand raised, chin on her chest. Radna turns to her.

RADNA

Anne why is your hand raised?

ANNE

I did.

RADNA

You did what?

ANNE

For God sake girls! Are you all going senile?

JEANIE

(chuckles)

Who isn’t?

RADNA

Who isn’t what?

JEANIE

OMG. Going senile! Who isn’t going senile?

Everyone raises their hand and shakes their head no and mumbles not me. Look at each other to verify they aren’t.

RADNA

Back to what I asked…Anne why is your hand raised?

Anne looks up at her hand.

ANNE

Um…I can’t remember. Oh! yes. Wait I know…I did!

RADNA

Did what?

ANNE

Dope, remember? I smoked a joint want one?

Pulls out a joint and grins. Martha shakes her head no.

MARTHA

Nope… Martinis for me.

JEANIE

Scotch on the rocks for me.

SILVIA

I’m prone to liqueurs nice and sweet and easy and….

Radna interrupts frustrated .

RADNA

Ok ladies this is not working we have this big task ahead of us and you all are ….ah um – never mind. Remember? The gold? Why we are here tonight we could be watching TV.

They all nod yes.

SILVIA

What do watch?

RADNA

STOP! No more chat chit!

TILDA

It’s chit chat.

Radna ignore her and walks over to the center of the room.

RADNA

Let’s circle up and get centered with an OM.

The all stand and line up in front of Radna looking like the seven dwarfs. She rolls her eyes. Draws a circle in the air.

RADNA (CONT’D)

This is a circle and you are a line!

They quickly shuffle around and form a circle and hold hands. Anne starts the OMMMMM. They all join in one at a time trying to look serious. The toning never quite builds into a crescendo.

Tilda yawns as she OMMMS. Soon everyone is yawning and trying to OMMMM.

RADNA (CONT’D)

Ok, ok, I give up lets do it your way. YUMMMMM…

Soon the women are smiling and are singing a choir of YUMMMS until it they all feel glorious.

SILVIA

Cookie time?

The women nod and head back to their chairs. The women each grab a cookie and have pleasurable moment as they munch.

Tilda jumps up holds and her cookie up like the statue of liberty.

TILDA

Aha a Yum….yummm?

Martha jerks her back down and frowns at her to shush. Everyone continues to munch contently.

RADNA

Soooo, I was thinking we might need some help on this treasure hunt.

GROUP

Help?

RADNA

Perhaps a ghost or two?

Radna smiles and waits for a response. Silvia chokes over her cookie. Grabs her water.

They look at each other and get what Radna has just said knowing she is not kidding. They begin to freak all at once.

They gulp. Smile nervously. Some try not to twitch. Anne smirks.Silvia jumps up runs to the door to leave.

Tilda runs after her and blocks the door spread eagle.

Silvia whines and crosses her legs .

SILVIA

I’ve got to pee!

Martha walks over and grabs the big fancy china bowl from the sidebar. Hands it to Silvia. Silvia stares at her then the bowl.

SILVIA (CONT’D)

Never mind.

They all go sits back down.

RADNA

Ok that suggestion didn’t go well. Lets’s ask the pendulum if we should have ghost help us.

Everyone nod yes,

RADNA (CONT’D)

Good! Silvia why don’t you do us the favor and dowse?

Silvia looks at Radna and points her to herself with a you want me look. She stands up with her pendulum and raises it. Her hands shakes too much. Martha and Jeanie hold her still.

RADNA (CONT’D)

Ok ready?…Mr…Pendulum …

She turns to Radna.

SILVIA

Is a pendulum a he or she?

Radna rolls her eyes.

SILVIA (CONT’D)

Never mind, ah pendulum should we have ghost help us?

The pendulum quickly responds with a big yes! Silvia faints back into the sofa.The women fan her face.

Anne is playing with her pendulum hypnotically.

ANNE

Did she pee?

Tilda looks.

TILDA

Nope…not a drop …oh wait a moment ….oh My God…nope just joking.

Silvia opens her eyes Jeanie gives her the bottle of water.She gulps and gulps.

RADNA

Ok those who need to take bathroom break GO.

All but Martha jumps up to go. Radna calls after them.

RADNA (CONT’D)

But let me remind you, it is not a good idea to keep ghost waiting.

(Chuckles)

We”ll meet you outside by the fountain.

Radna and Martha walk towards the porch door. Radna stops and turns to her.

RADNA (CONT’D)

Did you know ghost don’t have to pee?

• This reply was modified 3 years, 11 months ago by  Eclipse Neilson.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Topper Outline!

I thought I had posted this but I can’t find it.What I’ve learn is to push the scene to a funnier level. Also I realized I had two scenes that I had collapsed into one because it was one event but one scene takes place outside. And so I have only included the inside scene for this assignment. I. found in this process one moment I am very proud of and tried it out and had lots of laughs. I was a little confused on what we were suppose to do but I hope this works.

COMEDY SITUATION: Radna and the girls go on a treasure hunt with their new dowsing pendulum crystals to find the hidden brass box filled with gold coins left by the ex-wife of the original owner George Wellworth. If they find the coins they will have enough money to make a down payment for the retirement home.

CHARACTER LOGLINES:

RADNA (80) a sophisticated free spirited hippie with a stern rebellious approach to life, has a flare for the supernatural and believes firmly everyone should want to be like her.

ANNE (97) wheelchair bound, hunched over, chin on her chest type of senior.She is a women of few words but when she speaks its to the point and has a bite to it.

SILVIA (78) eats when she is nervous – a bit of a fearful clown and the supernatural challenges her spiritual belief system though she tries to make nothing of it.

JEANIE (75) is gay has a Unitarian way of understanding the world but mostly keeps to herself.

TILDA (75) was raised a gypsy, talks too much, is a people pleaser and knows she needs to stand up for herself.

MARTHA once a successful business woman who never took a break, trusts no one and has little patience but now must simply be one of the gals.

OUTLINE OF FUNNY MOMENTS

Figure of speech: To Be Or Not to Be

The small group of women – the wanna be rebels, meet in the sitting room after bedtime. They are in their night gowns with their over coats. Martha walks in with a sexy negligee – a variety of comments and playful actions.

(Brainstorming for comments )

Oh la la to

Are you kidding me.

Where’s your boobs? * (one I will use)

There’s always one in the crowd.

They have flash lights

(Brainstorming)

They play blink, blink with them like children.

Tilda starts the rap sound pretending she is holding a mike as she blinks her light.

and beat boxes.

shaboom bee bop bob turns it into the song who put the bomp in the bomp bomp song

BRAINSTORM

Radna is at the head of the table getting a bit frustrated – taps her fingers and yells out

ok who smoked the dope? * (one I will use)

Ok ladies all aboard

Tilda jumps back begins a rap of who smoke the dope. Soon the other women pick it up. Who smoked the dope.

They all answer sarcastically with a “who me?” and dumb expression on their faces.

The only one who raises their hand to the question is Anne they suddenly look at her. Tilt their heads.

Long back and forth about why her hand is raised . And questions who senile and whose not type of back and forth funny situation. She at one point forgets why her hand is up but then remembers. They discover her hand is raised because she has answered Radna’s question letting them know she smoked dope earlier.

Radna tells them this is not working tells them to circle up for a real OM .Tells them to circle up They stand in line. Instead looking like the seven dwarfs. She rolls her eyes makes a comment. Draws in the air that this is a circe and that they are a line comment .

They start to Omm . Trying to be seriously sacred.

No one really gets into it-

Tilda yawns the yawn gets catchy between OMS soon everyone is yawning with half oms

Radna gives up -tells them “oh what the hell knowing they want to do the yum chant.

Starts the Yumm toning – soon it becomes a choir of yums in every possible form . The RUNNING GAGS

(NOTE: this yumm tone was started before in a few scenes before and is repeated.)

They sit down feeling good. Silvia pulls out of her bag a box of cookies.

Everyone takes one starts to munch- variety of dreamy faces- ahs oohs and a yum. Soon all start the 100 ways of saying yum. Tilda jumps up raising her cookie like the statue of liberty to start the yum tone – Martha quickly pulls her down. The rest of the women frown at her.

They continue to munch but quietly.

Radna looks at all of them suggest they might need help from the resident ghosts. Smiles and waits for a response.

Silvia chokes over her cookie. Grabs her water.

They look at each other -get what Radna has just said know she is not kidding and freak all at once. They gulp. Smile nervously. Some try not twitch. Anne smirks.

Silvia jumps up runs to the door to leave.

Tilda blocks the door spread eagle – not letting anyone escape. Silvia whines she has to pee! Crossing her legs.

Martha is checking the price of gold these days on her phone, announces it’s value as she gets up and walks over to Silvia – makes comment on possible investments, snaps it close and grabs the expensive china bowl on the sideboard hands it to Silvia . Raises a stern motherly eyebrow. Tell her she can use it . Silvia says never mind and goes sit back down. Grabs her water. Everyone says no and reminds her she has to pee and water will make it worse.

They get back to the ghost talk – Radna tells Silvia to consult her pendulum.

Silvia stands up – hand shakes from nerves. Martha and Jeanie hold her still –

Radna – ask the question about having ghost help.

The pendulum quickly responds with a big yes.

Silvia faints.

Anne ask if she wet her pants? while she swings her pendulum back and forth hypnotizing herself.

(Brainstorm responses.)

Tilda looks – nope

Not a drop

Oh my god!….. Just joking nope

Silvia comes to. They give her the water.

Radna tells everyone to take a bathroom break and meet out in the garden in five minutes.

Some of the women get up and rush to the bathroom. She yells after them

(Brainstorming) Figure of speech To pee or not pee

Let me remind you it is not a good idea to keep ghost waiting.

She turns to Martha ask her if she know what happens if you keep a ghost waiting too long

Martha shakes her head no as the walk out the door.

Radna turns and looks at her with a serious expression and ask

Did you know ghost don’t have to pee?

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Action/Props

What I’ve learn I added a few more but already had action props.

INCONGRUENCE

The main incongruence is the women are seniors age range 75-97. All but Radna know nothing about metaphysical or supernatural experiences and they are about to begin an adventure to find buried gold that a ghost has instructed them about.

OUTLINE OF FUNNY MOMENTS (props included)

Figure of speech: To Be Or Not to Be

The small group of women – the wanna be rebels, meet in the sitting room after bedtime. They are in their night gowns with their over coats. Martha walks in with a sexy negligee – a variety of comments and playful actions.

(Brainstorming for comments )

Oh la la to

Are you kidding me.

Where’s your boobs? * (one I will use)

There’s always one in the crowd.

(Brainstorming for prop) NEGLIGEE AND PENDULUM

Martha flashes her negligee

Martha pulls out her pendulum and struts across the room as if she was on stage in a fashion show.

(Brainstorming for prop) FLASHLIGHT

(The women use their flashlights)

They play blink, blink with them like children.

Tilda starts the rap sound pretending she is holding a mike as she blinks her light.

and beat boxes.

shaboom bee bop bob turns it into the song who put the bomp in the bomp bomp song

BRAINSTORM

Radna is at the head of the table getting a bit frustrated – taps her fingers and yells out

ok who smoked the dope? * (one I will use)

Ok ladies all aboard

Martha responds no Martinis for me

Silvia responds Scotch on the rocks

Tilda jumps back begins a rap of who smoke the dope. Soon the other women pick it up. Who smoked the dope.

They all answer sarcastically with a “who me?” and dumb expression on their faces.

The only one who raises their hand to the question is Anne they suddenly look at her. Tilt their heads.

Long back and forth about why her hand is raised . And questions who senile and whose not type of back and forth funny situation. She at one point forgets why her hand is up but then remembers. They discover her hand is raised because she has answered Radna’s question letting them know she smoked dope earlier.

(Brainstorming for prop) JOINT

Anne pull out a joint and ask if anyone wants one.

Radna tells them this is not working tells them to circle up for a real OM .Tells them to circle up They stand in line. Instead looking like the seven dwarfs. She rolls her eyes makes a comment. Draws in the air that this is a circle and that they are a line comment

They start to Omm . Trying to be seriously sacred.

No one really gets into it-

Tilda yawns the yawn gets catchy between OMS soon everyone is yawning with half oms

Radna gives up -tells them “oh what the hell knowing they want to do the yum chant.

Starts the Yum toning – soon it becomes a choir of yums in every possible form . The RUNNING GAGS

(NOTE: this yumm tone was started before in a few scenes before and is repeated.)

They sit down feeling good. Silvia pulls out of her bag a box of cookies.

(Brainstorming for prop)COOKIES

Everyone takes one starts to munch- variety of dreamy faces- ahs oohs and a yum. Soon all start the 100 ways of saying yum. Tilda jumps up raising her cookie like the statue of liberty to start the yum tone – Martha quickly pulls her down. The rest of the women frown at her.

They continue to munch but quietly.

(Brainstorming for prop) LAMPS

Radna looks at all of them suggest they might need help from the resident ghosts. Smiles and waits for a response. The lamps go off

George Wellworth ( the ghost ) remains invisible taps a few of the women’s shoulders . They respond differently.

Silvia chokes over her cookie. Grabs her water.

They look at each other -get what Radna has just said know she is not kidding and freak all at once. They gulp. Smile nervously. Some try not twitch. Anne smirks.

Silvia jumps up runs to the door to leave.

Tilda blocks the door spread eagle – not letting anyone escape. Silvia whines she has to pee! Crossing her legs.

(Brainstorming for prop( CHINA BOWL

Martha is checking the price of gold these days on her phone, announces it’s value as she gets up and walks over to Silvia – makes comment on possible investments, snaps it close and grabs the expensive china bowl on the sideboard hands it to Silvia . Raises a stern motherly eyebrow. Tell her she can use it . Silvia says never mind and goes sit back down. Grabs her water. Everyone says no and reminds her she has to pee and water will make it worse.

(Brainstorming for prop) PENDULUM

They get back to the ghost talk – Radna tells Silvia to consult her pendulum.

Silvia stands up – hand shakes from nerves. Martha and Jeanie hold her still –

Radna – ask the question about having ghosts help.

The pendulum quickly responds with a big yes.

Silvia faints.

Anne ask if she wet her pants? while she swings her pendulum back and forth hypnotizing herself.

(Brainstorm responses.)

Tilda looks – nope

Not a drop

Oh my god!….. Just joking nope

Silvia comes to. They give her the water.

Radna tells everyone to take a bathroom break and meet out in the garden in five minutes.

Some of the women get up and rush to the bathroom. She yells after them

(Brainstorming) Figure of speech To pee or not pee

Let me remind you it is not a good idea to keep ghost waiting.

She turns to Martha ask her if she know what happens if you keep a ghost waiting too long

Martha shakes her head no as the walk out the door.

Radna turns and looks at her with a serious expression and ask

Did you know ghost don’t have to pee?

• This reply was modified 3 years, 11 months ago by  Eclipse Neilson.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Day 7

What I’ve learn is to focus on the comedy only in this scene,(even the subtext) even though this is drama/comedy . I wrote this scene which will be closer to the end but haven’t I haven’t gotten there yet. I am only fifty pages in.So I suspect may changes. The brainstorming is not ina any special order.

COMEDY SITUATION: Radna and the girls go on a treasure hunt with their new dowsing pendulum crystals to find the hidden brass box filled with gold coins left by the ex-wife of the original owner George Wellworth. If they find the coins they will have enough money to make a down payment for the retirement home.

LOGLINES:

RADNA RADNA (80) a sophisticated free spirited hippie with a stern rebellious approach to life, has a flare for the supernatural and believes firmly everyone should want to be like her.

ANNE (97) wheelchair bound, hunched over, chin on her chest type of senior.She is a women of few words but when she speaks its to the point and has a bite to it.

SILVIA (78) eats when she is nervous – a bit of a fearful clown and the supernatural challenges her spiritual belief system though she tries to make nothing of it.

JEANIE (75) is gay keeps, has a Unitarian way of understanding the world but mostly keeps to herself.

TILDA (75) was raised a gypsy, talks too much, is a people pleaser and knows she needs to stand up for herself.

RADNA’S MOTHER GHOST ( 30’s) a sophisticated beauty of the roaring 20’s with a flare for life even though she is ghost.

MARTHA once a successful business woman who never took a break, trusts no one and has little patience but now must simply be one of the gals.

THE NIGHT CHILD (7) a young child spirit who sings ,dances and uses the Tarot deck to advise the elders.

GEORGE WELLWORTH (70) a good looking wealthy ghost who was seen in life as boring and is now trying to be unique and interesting.

BRAIN STORM/POSSIBLE FUNNY MOMENTS

EMBARRASSMENT:

They dress in night gowns and treasure hunting gear.

EMBARRASSMENT:

Anne plays pendulum and begins to hypnotize herself.

FORCED UNION OF INCOMPATIBLE :

They bicker a lot

FORCED UNION OF INCOMPATIBLE :

They are forced to call in the ghost of the mansion.

COMIC SURPRISE:

Three ghost/spirits work with them George, Radna’s Mother and the Night child.

Anne and child bond both have trickster personalities.

WILDLY IN APPROPRIATE RESPONSE

The women flirt with George

EMBARRASSMENT:

Enter kitchen first eat steal food.

COMIC SURPRISE:

Silvia freaks want to escape.

EMBARRASSMENT:

Look in all the wrong places

COMEDIC TRAGEDY

Find box in George’s favorite dog’s grave.

COMIC SURPRISE:WILDLY INAPPROPRIATE RESPONSE

Anne does the last ghostly spook

OUTLINE

The small group of women- the wanna be rebels, meet in the living room, after bedtime. They are in their night gowns with their over coats.

They have flash lights – some have their cell phone.They play blink blink with them like children.

Radna is at the head of the table handing out a map of the house and garden layout.

They bicker over who should go with whom.

Pause to practice their dowsing tools.Some try to control their pendulums.

Radna decides they should all start out together at first.

They enter the kitchen, Silvia runs to the fridge finds the muffins passes them out takes two for the road stuffs them in her pocket.

Martha checks the price of gold these days on her phone, announces its value makes comment on possible investments, snaps it close and pays attention.

Jeanie and Tilda check all the cans and bread boxes bins for gold realize that was dumb since box is square and a different size.

Anne plays with her pendulum while in her wheel chair and begins to hypnotize herself.

Radna sees its not working tells them to circle up for a OM together moment to get centered but they line up instead looking like the seven dwarfs.She rolls her eyes makes a comment.

She suggest they will need help from the ghostly residents. Smiles waiting for response.

They freak all at once. Silvia runs to the door to leave. But Tilda blocks the door not letting anyone escape.

They discuss ghost who what and when.

Silvia says she has to pee Martha hands her a bowl.

They finally consult their pendulums – yes is the answer

Three spirited ghost show up – The Night Child, singing the whistle a happy tune song from king and I

Radna’s motherghost with her roaring twenties gold studded dress and mannerisms.

George Wellworth in his late 1800’s outfit.

A cat ghost comes around the corner starts playing with the pendulums.

Silvia wants to stay inside with Anne. The Night Child says she will keep her company. Silvia reacts but calms down.

The exit into the garden pendulums and flashlights in hand.

Soon a large group of fancy dressed other era spirits appear and wave hello and move on.

Some get curious and follow along to observe the women who haven’t realized they are being followed.

Radna tells them to turn off the lights – she tells them do hold hands but everyone’s hand is full. She tells them to follow her and she will let them have everyone whisper if anything is there to trip over. It becomes a long line whispers of “roots, stones ,corners” and other objects being sent down the line like the game of telephone

Under the moonlight in the open rose garden they begin dowsing – first left step by step then right then in circles each following their pendulum instructions until they are all over the place.

Silvia rolls out Anne places her wheel chair in the middle of the action. Night child takes Anne’s hand and helps.They have bonded.

George flirts with Jeanie who has to tell him she gay- he doesn’t know what that means.She has to explain in a way he will get it.

Tilda gets jealous since George was flirting with her the other day and tells Jeanie forcefully he is hers to flirt with. (an act very unlike her and yes she knows he is a ghost.)

Radna’s mother steps in lights her cigarette in her extra long holder, exhales smoke in a Grerta Garbo style lets them both know she has already decided to make a move on him she IS a ghost so get lost .

The pendulums go wild at the base of a very large rose tree. The women huddle around it. Nervous but excited. George says that is where his old dog is buried. The cat looks up at him suddenly a mouse run out behind him between his legs . The women squeal

A ghost dog appears behind the bush , chases the cat who chases the mouse who jumps in the night child’s arms who pats him lovingly. Dog turns around and wags his tail excitely leaps on George who is thrilled to see his old hound.

They all get down on their knees and begin digging- mud and dirt get all over them. Soon they become children at the beach -someone make castles.

Suddenly they hear the sound of a car in driveway.

Flash lights go off. George tells them to act like ghost to become invisible. Each woman has their own way of what that looks like. Car drives away.

Flash lights go on. The begin t dig again.

The sound of metal on metal. They have found the box! Everyone digs faster.

Radna and Martha pulls it out of the hole.Everyone gives a little old lady jumps for glee

They open it and find a note. It is from Terresa, George’s runaway wife. (explained in an earlier scene.)

It reads you really think I would leave the gold behind ?!!- You old, boring, wealthy fool!

I knew you would never dig up the grave. Ha haha

The women look down at the hole, jump when they realize they have dug up a grave and quickly cover it again.

Anne looks up from her common head on chest position -makes a comment- about George being an old fool . Turns to Radna and makes a comment about whether she has a plan C . She hangs her head back down and mumbles something about having one . Everyone gets excited – Anne snoozes with a big smile on her face.

The women wheel her back to her room with box on her lap.they get her into bed.

She points to a letter on the bureau. Smiles and falls back to sleep. Begins to snore.

The women look over at the letter. Chit chat . See it is is addressed to them. They look back at Anne to ask about it .They see the smile on her face that looks more like a smirk – but it seems strangely frozen. She has stopped snoring.

They look at each other nudge each other to go check if she is ok.

(pause) all say at once “oh-oh”

(Beat)

Anne suddenly opens her eyes they all squeal . Anne laughs out loud.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Day 6

1) What I’ve learned this is a very useful tool and I addded a last line because of it.

LOGLINE

RADNA(80’s) a sophisticated free spirited hippie with a stern rebellious approach to life, has a flare for the supernatural and believes firmly everyone should want to be like her.

SVENSKY 65(protagonist)old school type of psychiatrist who has no sense of humor.

NOTE: This is Radna’s first visit with the director of the retirement home.

2)Scene

INT.PSYCHIATRIST OFFICE -DAY

SVENSKY 60’s dressed in white med coat has a snooty look as he reads notes. Looks up. Stares across the desk at Radna. She stares right back at him.

SVENSKY

So, it says here your niece felt it was time for you to join our family?

Radna says nothing. He recognizes a problem points to a scribbled note. Reads out loud.

SVENSKY (CONT’D)

Prone to eccentricities? And/or depression?

RADNA

Sounds like my mother. Have you got the right chart?

She chuckles at her own sarcasm. He looks up stares at her. Shakes his head in disapproval.

SVENSKY

I’m here to help. Sometimes meds can calm your anxiety…

RADNA

I’m not anxious…are you?

He shakes his head no.

RADNA (CONT’D)

My point exactly!

He sighs.

SVENSKY

Well Miss Radna for now it looks like you’ve got your wits about you. Try to socialize a bit more….hmm…I see you have made a friend. I will suggest adding another at your table. A get to know you experience.

Radna stands up. Looks down at him, turns with a bit of a waltz step and sings under her breath.

RADNA

Getting to know you…getting to despise you…

2)FIGURE OF SPEECH DEFINITIONS

RADNA’s response

ABSURD REQUEST: But of course, will it be you joining us for the “get to know you experience?”

COMPARISON: Ah, a mad Hatter’s tea party in the making!

EXAGGERATION: So this is how friends for life are made? But let me remind you Dr.Svensky, we are near the end of ours – life that is.

INSULT: Got any other brilliant ideas?

METAPHOR: A breaking bread type of experience?

MISINTERPRETATION: You want me to be the life of the party?

PARODY:(sings) Getting to know you…Getting to know you, getting to know all about you…

RENAME:(sings)Getting to know you…getting to despise you…

REVERSAL: You are absolutely right -shall I plan a party?

UNDERSTATEMENT: How did you become so smart?

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Day 5

Character Logline: RADNA (80) a sophisticated hippie with a flare for the unusual and a stern approach, is placed in an old fashion retirement home for mostly conservative women.In time she brings out the mini hippie in each of the residents in ways they could never imagine.

NOTE: The scene takes place the first night at the retirement home after a hard day of extreme change and silent rejection by the group.

INT. RADNA’S ROOM – NIGHT

Room is dark. Light from lamp post outlines the small sparse space.

Beside the single bed, is a carved lady lamp and a stack of books – the bible, the Egyptian Book of the Dead, and A Garden verse of poetry.

A wingback and small table faces sliding doors to a porch. At the foot of the chair is a basket full of hand made colorful cloth hats and bright scarves.

A side table with a sketch pad with a half finished drawing of the garden outside. A laptop and a pile of notes.

Radna lays under the covers and stares up at the ceiling as if she is looking at the heavens. One tear rolls down her cheek. She sighs, closes her eyes and turns over. Faces the wall.

Silence.

A child’s SOFT HAUNTING VOICE begins singing “Don’t fence me in.”

Radna opens one eye, listens closely. Frowns bewildered. Shakes her head no. Shuts her eyes again.

The soft child voice continues.

Radna puts her pillow over her face. Child continues.

(Beat)

She slowly removes it and turns back over to look.

In a corner a young girl(7)dances circling a white toy dog standing next to a cloth satchel on the floor. Her body catches the moonlight.

Radna startles. Stares a bit aghast. Raises one eyebrow in a strict manner. Clears her throat to get the child’s attention. Uses a take charge tone.

RADNA

Excuse me?

The child continues dancing. Then stops and slowly turns around and looks at Radna coyly. They stare at each other silently.

RADNA (CONT’D)

And who are you?

The child gives a curious stare and then smiles.

CHILD

Me…I’m me.

She starts dancing again. Radna pulls herself up. Crosses her arms and uses a superior snappy tone.

RADNA

I don’t know who you ARE or why you ARE here! And I haven’t smoked dope in a half a century, so that’s not why this is happening.

CHILD

It doesn’t matter.

RADNA

Of course it matters!…I want to know!… And while you ARE. at it. Tell me what’s there to dance about?

The child shrugs her shoulders.

CHILD

I donno.

RADNA

Look it’s been a bad day… shooo out!

Motions her to leave.

The child stops. Kneels down to her bag. Hugs her toy dog. Looks up at Radna, smiles and pulls out a deck of cards. Spreads them out. Motions her to come.

CHILD

Pick one.

RADNA

No.

CHILD

You were always stubborn – obstinate to be precise…I think I remembered they called you the “obstinate little wench.”

RADNA

Still am, but how do you know?

Child starts to hum and dance again – ignoring Radna.

CHILD

Ok. Then I’ll choose one for you.

She pulls a card from the pile looks at it. Giggles. Holds it to her chest. Rolls her eyes in a flirtatious glee.

CHILD (CONT’D)

Oh! I love him.

Child gathers up her cards stuffs them back in her satchel.

Ties the knot. Hums her tune. Walks to the chair and carefully places the card on top of the drawing. Skips back across the room to the corner. Turns around. Smiles.

CHILD (CONT’D)

We’re going to have fun… you and me.

She stops smirks and vanishes. Her song fades away.

Radna stares at the empty space then crawls out of bed hobbles over to the table and picks up the card. It is the Tarot’s Magician. She studies it.

Carries it back to her bed and leans it against the lamp. Stares at it. Turns off the light. Mutters.

RADNA

Fuck! No one will ever believe me…. (Beat) or… perhaps they will…

She closes her eyes and slowly smiles.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Day 4

What I’ve learned is that set ups, and opposites can make it funny. Originally I had written this with more sadness but when adding humor I feel it carries it along better.

(This is the opening scene. ) Radna is being sent to the retirement home. Clearly she comes from money. She and her niece are opposites. And it is a tragic moment.

FADE IN.

Sound of TIRES ON GRAVEL

EXT. FRONT ENTRANCE-DAY

Limo slowly enters through broken down large stone archway. Through window we see RADNA (80)a stoic woman with a strong presence. Dressed in a sophisticated hippie type flare and a colorful cloth hat staring out.

On the opposite side of the car seat her NEICE a younger (50)perfectly coifed blond, ascot, monogram jersey talks on her phone.

Radna watches two rabbits scamper. Fairy like folk dash to the bushes. Ghost like images of people dressed in different eras meandering around.

Niece observes her painted nails.

Limo stops at entrance steps of a small elegant retirement home needing some work. Chauffeur jumps out and opens door to help Radna out.

She refuses assistance. But hands him a bright green painted cane with a carved handle of a goofy looking grinning toad. He looks slightly embarrassed holding it.

Radna steps out, stands tall and clutches her tie dyed shoulder bag. The chauffeur hands her the cane. She strokes the toad’s head lovingly and raises it like a staff.

Niece steps out behind, her black slacks spike heals appear first she is still on the phone( some business transaction). She motions for chauffeur to carry bags to steps.

NIECE

Yes I said a hundred shares- no I mean…hold on one minute…

She stops talking but keeps phone to ear. Radna and her look at each other expressionless. They do a formal cheek to cheek kiss goodbye. In mid kiss goodbye, a black bird suddenly swoops over head. Both duck and squeal. Niece throws phone up in the air.

Phone bumps Radna’s face. It drops onto the ground. Radna rubs her nose. As niece looks for phone.

MAN ON PHONE

Hello, Hello, anybody there?

The Niece bends over to pick it up. Radna quickly places her cane on top of the phone to stop her. The helloes go silent. The Niece looks horrified and then furious.

Radna lifts her cane off the phone. Seri responds.

SIRI ON PHONE

Shall I look that up?

Both look down at the phone.

RADNA AND NIECE

No!

They return to their stare off.

A female receptionist, a little frazzled, rushes out and greets them. Runs down the steps.

RECEPTIONIST

So, so, so sorry I am late… here let me help…

She sees that she has walked into a “moment”. Smiles nervously.

Niece gets in the car closes the door and motions the chauffeur to leave.

Receptionist dismayed turns to help Radna up the stairs. Radna pushes her hand away never looking at her. Holds her head up high and slowly walks up the stairs. At the top she turns around looks at the grounds. Her eyes brim.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Title: (Eclipse Neilson ) Funny situations

What I’ve learn you can always make it funnier when aware of these techniques. This script has funny moments and at times deep moments. It is a dramedy.

Radna (the sophisticated hippie,) though the newest member of the senior residence, has become the leader. The residents have recently been told that their place is going up for sale and this could mean trouble and loss (just as they finally begin to like each other.)

Anne is the oldest and most often sits in her wheelchair , hunched over, chin on her chest.She is a women of few words.

Tilda is the people pleaser who talks too much.

INT.MAIN SITTING ROOM – EVENING

The women are sitting around a card table. Radna is holding a deck of cards.

RADNA

Now that we are getting to know each other; thanks to Jeanie’s awesome courage.

She smiles at Jeanie. Turns to them with a slight smirk and teasing tone. NOTE: Jeanie a few scenes back confessed she was gay)

RADNA (CONT’D)

I think we should play a new game ….remember Truth or Dare?

The women giggle – some roll their eyes – then suddenly one at a time realize what this could entail.

TILDA

What do you mean “dare?”

RADNA

Well, I was thinking the highest card got to ask the question and the lowest card has to answer. If one refuses, they have to show us either their Happy dance – Sexy dance or excuse my language, the Fuck you dance!

Everyone laughs then gets the reality of the game. Some wince as they nervously look as Radna passes the cards out face down.

Sylvia pulls out a tissue wrapped brownie. Takes a huge bite. Speaks with mouth full and with a bit of a whine.

SILVIA

Do we have to play?

RADNA

Look! If we are going to be an army or maybe we should call ourselves a “team to reckon with” against any big bad corporate buyer, we better get to know each other – trust is our goal here. We’ve got to have each other’s back. Get my breeze?

Tilda whispers to Radna.

TILDA

It’s drift – get my drift.

RADNA

What ever drift- breeze- wind – you know what I mean- right girls?

The women nod yes and pull the chairs closer to the table. They all sigh as they stare nervously at the card face down.

RADNA (CONT’D)

Now before we start, lets do a group dance! Like we do with June. NOTE: June is the physical therapist.

They all stand up. Radna starts singing the notes to My, My Delilah (Tom Jones) They join her and do a group sway around the table.

Anne in her chair, chin laying on her chest with her hands raised conducts the group as they sway and sing.

All begin to giggle. Radna smiles and nods for everyone to sit back down.

RADNA (CONT’D)

Now we will turn one card at a time and girls remember it is about trust.

Each woman cautiously turns over the card as the group looks. They all remain silent, look at each other’s card. The High card is Tilda’s who is greatly relieved and the low card is Anne’s. They all look at Anne with a what are you going to do look.

TILDA

Oh. It’s me who has to ask the question.

Looks up. Looks back at Anne. Smiles kindly.

TILDA (CONT’D)

Ok I’ll make this easy – don’t want to push too hard…. Tell me any secret you want…. or if you don’t never mind…

They all nod approvingly at Tilda’s question and turn back to Anne.

Anne nods a slow yes , then looks up and stares at them.

Tilda

You really don’t have to answer this.

Radna frowns at Tilda.

ANNE

Oh what the hell, at my age, I ain’t got time to fool around or drag this out. I’ll show you all how to play this game … my secret is

(slowly grins ).

I was a stripper.

(Chuckles)

Thats how I got through college!

The women’s eyebrows raise.

ANNE (CONT’D)

No one was going to stop me from getting what I needed to succeed!

They all swallow their gasp. Look at the cards as Radna hands out a new batch and giggles.

RADNA

Stakes are getting higher.

They once again turn the cards over. Silvia’s is the highest and Radna’s is the lowest. Radna rolls her eyes. Looks in the distance and sees her Mother’s ghost standing there looking at her. Radna gives her a little help me look. Her mother raises one eyebrow.

NOTE: Radna’s ghost Mother always dresses in a roaring twenties outfit and smoke a cigarette with a long diamond stud cigarette holder.

SILVIA

Well, we already know I did a lot of dope and since YOU Radna came up with this idea. Tells us something unbelievable about yourself.

Silvia smiles and finishes her brownie brushes the crumbs into her palm and licks them up.

Radna looks at them. Brushes the question off with a cocky laugh. Looks back at her mother who winks at her.

RADNA

I’ll tell you something but you wont believe me … so I’ll start dancing my silly dance…

She stands up and does a two step dance, singing the notes to Yellow Submarine – the Beatles.

RADNA (CONT’D

Dah Dah dada dah!…Dah , I see spirits… good ones that is.

The woman are aghast looking like they don’t know if they heard her right.

Radna sits back down with a so there take that look.. Every one is silent as she passes out the new cards.

MONTAGE (silent)

– A repeat of questions and cards being dealt is repeated. Some answers- others get a question shake their head no and get up and dance.

FADES BACK TO THE PRESENT

Radna deals the cards. Martha gets the low card and Anne gets the high card. Anne slowly lifts her head and stares directly at her.

ANNE

You have that type of confidence -one I admire …but I’ve been around -know the ins and outs of people’s expressions… I’d say m’lady, YOU are carrying some big secret .. So Martha the ‘big business’ one, what was it that tripped you up in life? What’s the secret shame?

Everyone looks at Martha and back at Anne who has rested her chin back on chest. All begin to shake their head in disapproval.

TILDA

That’s awfully deep…you don’t have too…

The women shushes Tilda.

Anne looks like a deer in the headlights. Looks at everyone to see if she can trust them. Turns away. Stands up and darts across the room over to a corner chair. The women stare at her. She sits upright frozen.

Radna looks at her , pauses , frowns gently and gets up and walks over. Nods to the door.

RADNA

Lets you and me take a walk in the garden.

She turns back to the other women, motions them to continue.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

(ECLIPSE NEILSON) Comedy plots

What I’ve learn is to look over all the possibilities one can do with the three plots.

1.Fish out of water: RADNA , a sophisticated hippie type woman with a new age flare and psychic gifts is placed unwillingly in a conservative retirement home where everyone is in a snooty clique and has mostly given up on life.

2.Incongruent pairings : A circle of women with very different backgrounds and life styles become best friends to fight for a common cause their home.

THE GROUP

A)RADNA recovering from a wealthy dysfunctional family and confers with ghost has little patience and

B) TILDA who secretly came from old time gypsies talks too much and is a people pleaser.

C) ANNE (97) says very little has a hard time keeping her head up, says what she means and often shocks people with her few words and fowl language and

D) SILVIA a over eater people please devout catholic

E) JEANIE a secretly gay women who loss her wife a few years before.

F) MARTHA a cold hearted, successful black business woman .

3.Hilarious purpose : Radna must lead a mostly conservative group of women and help them cross all their boundaries and beliefs and seek help from three of her spirited ghost friends –

A) GEORGE WELLWORTH and is companions – the original owners of the mansion –

B) A young child dancer (Radna’s lost spirit child plays with tarot cards and

C) a roaring twenties madam of the evening – ( Radna’s mother ghost )

Each have an idea how to save the home and all send the women out on what seems like an impossible sometimes outrageous tasks.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

My name is Eclipse Neilson,

I have written 2 full feature scripts and I am working on two new ones.

I am working on my first drama/comedy and hope this class will help.

I am a unique person simply by my name (LOL), but I guess what is unique about me is I don’t give up easily for example years ago, I took on a corrupt town, led a two year campaign and freed an old lonely elephant from a life time in chains and neglect so that she could go to a sanctuary and live her last few years with a another of her species and freedom.

[Eclipse Neilson]

ALL OF ME – Eclipse Neilson DAY 1

What I learned is that I haven’t seen a lot of comedies but started to watch this one and saw a lot of what Hal was saying. Couldn’t find a good copy of the script -only the dialog. Lilly Tomlin and Steve Martin bring it to life along with stage set and other characters.

(Lawyer( Steve Martin) coming to make money off a very wealth woman. Set up knows nothing about what he is walking into -just that he has to get the case.)

Hi. Roger Cobb from Schuyler and

Mifflin to see Miss Cutwater.

Yes, sir, you are expected.

-I’ll show him up.

Betty Ahrens.

-I’m Roger Cobb.

Try not to excite her, ok?

-Grayson?

(Rich upper class women (Lilly Tomlin) in wheel chair everyone attending to her.The following lines are a set up. As she tosses her notes behind her as he wheels her along.)

Oh, yes, Madam?

Don’t forget to pick up

the invitations and make sure they’re

hand delivered the moment I die.

-The moment you die. Yes, Madam.

Oh! Oh, Mr….

-Cobb.

Cobb. Oh, yes, you’re the tedious one.

(Next two line a set up of surprises)

Would you mind accompanying me back

to my deathbed? Now, here’s the name

of my caterer, and the evening’s menu.

(The following line is a set up to let you know what she is doing.)

Make sure they have plenty

of goose pate, it’s marvelous.

Excuse me. Is this for the funeral?

One does not have that at a funeral.

Now, Mr. Fulton Norris is a wonderful

society orchestra. I should like you

to engage him for the entire weekend.

-Is this for the wake, Ma’am?

Heavens, no. It’s for a party and

I want it to a corker.

(I love these few lines that follow!)

Guess what I’m going to do?

-What?

I’m going to come back from the dead.

-Oh! And…

what makes you think you can do that?

-Because I’m rich.

Grayson, come in here, please, over.

Miss Cutwater, this is not a parking

ticket we’re talking about here,

this is the, oh, The Grim Reaper.

You cannot bribe the Grim Reaper.

Oh, Mr. Cobb, I spent a lifetime

shackled by freilty and poor health…

wheelchairs and sick beds.

It’s my heart, you see. It means well,

but it’s alsways been

something of lemon.

I’ve hat all the money in the world

and not one good chance to enjoy it.

I have never been to Europe.

I’ve ner been anywhere really.

Oh, sure I’ve ordered from Neiman’s

and Gucci’s,

but I’ve never actually been there.

I’ve never ridden my own horses.

I’ve never been to the ballet.

I’ve never danced.

But Cutwater’s aren’t quitters.

So, I’ve decided that if my wealth

cannot help me in this life, then by

God, it’s going to buy me another one.

(That last line is great one)

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Big Picture Open Loops

What I’ve learn that the more detail I give AI the better the answers that are going down the path I am choosing. Ido admit at times it is over whelming ,even though I know it will all fall into place.

ASSIGNMENT 1

1. Think about your Example Show. Make a list of the Big Picture open loops that were established early in the season.
2. All the different relationships that keep returning in the episodes.
3. The drug habit and how she attempts to resolve it.
4. Her unfolding ability to feel and express feelings that comes to dramatic closure at the end.

ASSIGNMENT 2:

1. Use this list to brainstorm big picture open loops for your first season that you will use to keep the audience captivated.

GOALS:

• New goals? Save the forest
• Discover her origins through her time travel, where clues are revealed.
• Her relationships with Winthrop, Wing and the old One. Her deepest feelings are for Wing who is only a ghostly illusion of a past life .clues will be revealed as time goes on.
• Goals related to the big picture? Ultimately she must heal her past and we get a glimpse of her future as we see her speaking to a child of war in the future.
• Crushed goals? Winthrop her beloved adopted father betrays her capolting her to the losses in life and one reveled in the beginning that is Winthrop in another life time.
• Competition / conflict around goals?

CONSEQUENCES:

• Are they going to be caught? She almost looses the forest from Winthrop’s betrayal.
• Problems created from past actions?
• Good plans gone wrong? She believes Winthrop her adopted father is her only adult on earth who has loved her but must suffer through the moment of betrayal and find her power as a young healer by finding a way to heal is grieving shame.

SOLVING PROBLEMS:

• What is the major problem for this character? She is different and has mystical psychic gifts that she can not deny and she is here with a destiny to fulfill to help save humanity.
• What are they trying to solve? Help save the soul of humanity and earth.
• Major change imposed on character? She grows up and must harness her rage as power.
• Previous solutions cause new problems?

RELATIONSHIPS:

• Relationships in peril?
• New relationships forming? The friends in her village who are able to let the mystical beings in the forest help them.
• Conflict inside relationships? She is in love with Wing but he is keeping a big secret from her.
• Relationships changing? She must let go of Wing hoping he will return to earth some how in the future for her- but how will that manifest.

DANGER / SURVIVAL / RISKS:

• Can they survive X? Will the forest and the mystical ones along with the trees and creature be saved?
• Putting themselves in danger / making dangerous decisions?
• Who else is pulled into their danger?
• Internal dangers – Robyn’s deep despair needing to be healed.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Inviting Obsession Through Mystery

What I’ve learned is that AI is fun but often gives me ideas I have already thought of and dismissed or it is not going in the direction I wish to. But with that stated, just like the assignments , it helps me continue to think outside of the box with at least one or two ideas each time..

Asignment 1

The Queens Gambit

The mystery is for Beth to discover her past and to understand the meaning of her mother’s teaching. The answers come as Beth encounters intense moments in her life.

ASSIGNMENT 2:

Create two mysteries for your show — one that shows up strong in the Pilot and the other that is revealed over time.

1. Create your Shocking Event Mystery and tell us the WWWWW and H, along with the part withheld.

• A. Shocking Event:The ancient museum piece diamond necklace will be seen and buried at the Mother tree portal when Robyn steps through the time portal as young child war orphan. She will not remember that it is there, But in various moments clues will be given to her and others. As the mystery of this ancient necklace is followed through the story.
• B. Secret: where does it come from? Shocking event -Burdock’s father steals it from Robyns Mother during the war after he rapes her.
• C. Investigation:Burdocks Mother murders her husband when she discovers the affair and the necklace.
• WWWWW and How: The ancient museum piece diamond necklace will be seen and buried at the Mother tree portal when Robyn steps through the time portal as young child war orphan. She will not remember that it is there, But in various moments clues will be given to her and others. As the mystery of this ancient necklace is followed through the story.
• The tree that holds a treasure is also the ancient symbol of the tree of life used in many ancient and current religions.
• Robyns mother was given the ancient diamond amulet from her family handed down by the women. Robyn was adopted from England and her mother worshiped the old Celtic earth religion.
• Answers the mystery of (where the diamonds came from)

Robyns mother was raped by Burdock’s father who stolen the amulet in a rage.

Burdocks wife (Walters mother) discovers the affair one drunken night and shoots him. She steals the amulet runs out to the woods and buries the amulet unknown to her the tree of life. She is arrested as she is coming out of the woods.

(Answer the mystery of why she murdered him)

Walter as a young child, saw the murder and watched his mother steal the amulet and run to the first. (Answers the mystery what happened to the diamonds)

years later He inquires his aging mother in prison about the amulet and where is it.

She acknowledges it is in the forest thus doubling the reason he wants to buy the forest under the guise of building a shopping corner.

Robyns mother’s now only as spirit is a voice who tells Robyn she must find the amulet and return it the universe. (In the beginning of the story setting up the mystery)

Robyn returns to the earth through the tree of life portal .Begins the mystery and clue of this tree that will weave through the story.

Walter Burdock has a short affair with Francis to see if she will go in with him to find the amulet. Not knowing it has been broken down to a handful of diamonds scattered in the first.

She uses blackmail over Winthrop to sell the forest to Burdock.

Robyn now in her twenties must find the amulet and sell it piece by piece and creates a treasure hunt .

The healing is when the village buys the forest and makes it nation reserve ,

Robyns first task is complete.

Each person in the end returns the diamonds to Robyn who knows they must return through the portal to the heavens one diamond at at time. Each diamond is a characters story who connects to Robyns quest to help save humanity in the future seasons.

• Part Withheld:

2. Create the Over Time Mystery and tell us the WWWWW and H, along with the part withheld.

• A. Cover up:Walter Burdock does not say why he wants to buy the forest
• B. Secret: He knows the diamonds are some where there
• C. Reveals:he will relive the horror of see the his mother shoot his father and steal the diamonds.
• WWWWW and How
• Part Withheld: Burdock watched his mother murder his father and run into the forest with the diamonds.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

Thank you!

[Eclipse Neilson]

Janeen if you got the lesson 4 and 5 could you do many of us a favor and post it here for us?t

[Eclipse Neilson]

Hi James I just wrote to services and told them many of us have not received lesson 4 and 5. Hope they fix it soon!

[Eclipse Neilson]

Deanne me neither.

[Eclipse Neilson]

I haven’t seen lesson 4 posted yet.hmmm

[Eclipse Neilson]

congratulations and love your collection of little ones!

[Eclipse Neilson]

Valeka yes I lived in Rome for a few years as as a teenager.and for your second question on astrology. I use a western/ tropical approach but mostly a touch of my own style. you might have virgo somewhere in your chart. lol and yes thank you about the elephant reply.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

You sound wonderful. I am an astrologer too- I love animals too and have 3 dogs 1 cat and 3 birds at the moment lol

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[Eclipse Neilson]

I love what you are writing about!

[Eclipse Neilson]

How fun to co create with your mom!

[Eclipse Neilson]

So glad to see you here!

[Eclipse Neilson]

Your work sounds intriguing .

[Eclipse Neilson]

hi Bobby glad to see you here.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Yes. I began my spirit leadership career in native American traditions and my first book was on the sacred four directions. I am so glad you are focusing

on this !

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[Eclipse Neilson]

I love hearing we have quite a few animal lovers in this group!

[Eclipse Neilson]

I had a couple of drinks with them back in the early 60’s when they would come over to the piper club.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Glad to see you here.

[Eclipse Neilson]

So glad to see you here and hope we will exchange scripts!

[Eclipse Neilson]

I am very impressed in your whats special statement. Take care.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Good to have a class with you again- it has been awhile.

[Eclipse Neilson]

One of the reasons I write what I do is inspired by the need to balance the news and hope to move people enough t protect the soul of humanity.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Glad to see you!

[Eclipse Neilson]

Good to see you here!

[Eclipse Neilson]

Erik sure my email is eclipsfey@aol.com

[Eclipse Neilson]

Eclipse Neilson Synopsis for Producer Interview

(I am still working out the story and outcome so this is most likely scattered. and had to post twice since the edit tool was not working.)

1. TITLE: MAKE ME AN ANEL

2. HIGH CONCEPT

A psychic runaway street artist, who confers with the angels and demons of others, has lost hope for anything but a tortured street life for herself and her dog until an eccentric, once famous hippie folksinger on the verge of suicide rescues them. ( a modern-day Harold and Maude)

3. Target Audience women 25+women

4. Genre Drama

5 Fits Budget 5-10million

6. Strong roles for bankable actors

Lead roles

1.) 17 yr old psychically gifted street artist, toughened by the harsh reality of her life, dreams of being a famous surrealist painter.

2.) 75 yr old once famous folksinger/activist afraid she is losing her purpose in life dreams to be on stage, sing one more song and fight one more cause but she is afraid time has passed her by.

Synopsis

SERENA a psychically gifted runaway street artist, toughened by the harsh reality of her life, secretly dreams of becoming a surrealist painter.. She has a special gift and is able to see the angel and the demons near people. She and her beloved dog WHISPER are given a home by WILOW LAMONT an eccentric old hippie folksinger/activist who has lost her purpose in life and is ready to give up. But still dreams of one more song- one more performance and one more purpose.

The two must learn to trust each as they face hard life facts and discover they are each other’s last bit of hope.

With the help of BREE an Irish housekeeper and a broken-wing angel named TRUTH , they slowly join forces to build a dream together. A shelter for runaway teen girls and their beloved dogs.

But the singer’s older brother a ruthless businessman wants to steal his sister’s home and put her away in a retirement home. He labels her “unfit.” The battle begins.

This forces Serena and the Bree Irish and the angel Truth to join forces to fight the brother and the legal authorities who believe an aging hippie and eccentric runaway is a high-risk investment for building a homeless shelter for girls.

Will Willow have her dream come true? Will she find her purpose? Fight one more cause? One more concert? Will the runaway finally find a safe home and feel loved. Will she paint the painting that will save her life and many other young girls?

The angel with the broken wing has the answer and leads Serena into the magical realms of her paintings to find who she needs to fight the battles.

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[Eclipse Neilson]

Thanks Andrew mine will be on its way in a few hours.

[Eclipse Neilson]

mine is eclipsfey@aol.com

made a mistake on the other one.I sent it.

[Eclipse Neilson]

would you like to exchange?

[Eclipse Neilson]

go to Home and then to WIM classes and then to mod 2nd draft. it is posted there.

[Eclipse Neilson]

My Vision: I want to be a great award-winning, successful writer, known for her genre, who creates the most beautiful films that inspire others to feel deeply, pause, and ponder ways to make the world a better place

What I learned from doing this assignment is…is keep writing and the character details can be added when neeeded.

Title: THE NUN AND THE WITCH

Genre: (mystical /Sci-fi )

Concept: A dedicated nun destined to become a saint, bonds with a witch to achieve a sacred task to battle the evils of hatred consuming the heart of humanity, only to find out that time is running out.

[Eclipse Neilson]

This is going to be great can’t wait to read it.

[Eclipse Neilson]

This sounds great

[Eclipse Neilson]

profound and interesting.

[Eclipse Neilson]

love it!

[Eclipse Neilson]

Cool

[Eclipse Neilson]

loved the pitch in toastmasters today glad to see you are in the class.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Christy,

Nice job I can see the whole scene- love the setting! And the facial expressions and clean dialog. Easy to relate too for children when the get in possible trouble. Lady McThorn knows exactly how to handle her husband- love it!

[Eclipse Neilson]

William you are absolutely right. It transitions to another scene where the group is outside looking for the gold. But since I think we were only suppose to do one scene. I ended it there.In one of our assignments I did both inside and outside.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Thank you Larry for the encouragement. My first comedy /dram script.

[Eclipse Neilson]

Hi Larry nice job- LOVE Martha Stewart in it. You got most of what Hal asked for. That is amazing. My only suggestion would be I would like to see a moment or so of the two being regular so the audience can move along with them down the trail so speak. eg. Swatting a mosquito and missing -something we might all do and can relate to.