Edward Brown
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Edward Brown
daydream, drive, walk barefoot in grass, fromally option possibiliies, write sell sail
learned I need to bring more emotions into celebrating and depressing
onmy visual boards
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Edward Brown
ponderr play with options, write sell rejoice sailing
I learned my script is really pilot for seriers. So to make it a cliff hanger at end, it set up what wanted at end for dangers open loops and then set it up earlier
It is on my board for me to visualize
But some:
Putin wants hypsonic, keeps secret from drag reducer researcher, Victor, protagonist’s dad
thus Putin is concerned American George is in romantic negiations the protagonist Tanya
kiosh waitress is FSB observer
Ivan, protagonists ex, is jealous his sex wife is serious about prospect George. Especially since Tanya is meeting face to pretty face in Red Square
so he starts training with saber
CREATOR believes in evolutions and natural selection picking winners and losers and only occasionally intervenes. But after what he saw Green planet, Creator joins total opposites organized in box proffsor Tanya with Detroit slop roofer Geroge as an experiement to discover dinmaics of making lovenot war or repeat of Red Mars extinction
So rather than let it play, Creator intevenes
it goes on
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Edward Brown character actions
write, sell, rejoice and sail
I learned take each character and install actions. On my wall board
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Edward Brown basic plot continues without gaps
I am getting this with a board
going up and down, I realized need more at end for this is pilot for BW to create suspense
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Edward Brown
deeper layer per acts
focus give mostest on big screen
Tanya before
Starts Go Getter > Go Giver
Seeks romance thru glamor
Seeks power thru association, connections to male
Vamps to win, Czarina
SEEKS PhD to be department head of culture
More than learn, bear, work, die
Sex = commitment to parent
Tanya after
Romance is dancing together
Not an ornament
Will neogiate
Composmise
Consents to partnership
Act 1
Victor views live Cremation
Recalls putting Tanya on Train
New Year Break out
Sent off by students, victor, Tolya
Ex lover steps in front of train sex = parent/provide
Train to Moscow flashbacks: class, winning, Boris, PG abortions, boring but prominent suitors,Czarina, groom rituals with face cream
Cousins go to win
Ball
Rejects Marriage
Crest fallen, no NYE midnight kiss
Inciting incitdent: romantic lover forever who is good parent/dad
To break out/ ny/ open to new approaches
Act 2 character normal response to change in lives
Prays on jet back
Scolds Tolya as male pig
Tells Dad funding coming
Midpoint turning point: twist that causes everything to change, but keeps the character on same journey – VAMP
call from George
Negotiates to please George some
Mentions Sailor
Dad can cut drag to win Mac
Meet in Red Square/ then Siberia if George prospect worth vamping
ACT 3 character rethinks journey and make real change to make happen
Valentine Tests
Researches qualifies George
Coaches GEORGE to be neater, calendar, habits, organized – minor league to majors
Turning point 3: another twist = biggest conflict
RED SQUARE rejects GEORGE tells go play with kite
Maybe Putin
Realized failed GEORGE’S test
Act 4CLIMAX: ULTIMATE EXPRESSION OF CONFLICT
RESULUTION : THEIR WORLD CHANGED. HOW END UP GOING THRU JOURNEY KITE BIRD DANCE HANDS VOW
Act 1 GEORGE
Slob, missy unorganized, misses deadlines, ungroomed
Pleases women too much, not self enough
STUCK IN SLUP
BUILDING TRIMARAN DREAMING sn
INCITING INCIDENT:
ANNA break up over sailing dream/win Mac/cosmic love waves
Turning point 1: major twist that sets conflict
Declares for new sailing partner/ drum role, music RR
ACT 2 character hs normal response to this change
Prays
Sail clubs/what parties/
Turning poin2/ midpoint major twist that keeps character on same journey
Laptop message “from Tanya”
Negotiate to meet and Kiss Bora Bora
Act 3 character rethinks their journey and make real changes to resolve things
Valentine test
Lockeout out/fix up
Arrested/calendar
Neat grooming
Habits
Decides Red Square break out vs Anna party
Makes me a better man
Turning Point 3 another major twist/big conflict
Told to go home
Kite
ACT 4 Resolutions
Bird Dance
Hands/ vow of partnership
George after
Neat, organized, groomed, good habits, calender, custom clothes, and determined not to be vamped pussy whipped
CREATOR
ACT 1 green planet in other galaxy
Creator advising survivors of high nuclear blast that wiped out electronics
Green Tigers told to work with Amish type farmers
Could have been like MARS extinction
Inciting incitement
Summoned to Blue Planet to find Tanya a romantic mate
Turning Point 1: Conflict with earthlings per natural selection, sex for parental bonding: NO DIVINE INTERVENTION
Has bigger concerns: no nuclear extinction
Cuts to Putin and Victor per hypersonic
How get nuke powers to pull in or lose planet
Saints argue making love is like making peace/ same dynamics
Over their paygrade, case workers for Tanya /family bombes bolcheviks
Threatened level Novosibirsk if grandma not released
Experiment
Creator:
Not intervening much
Believed sex should bond parents
Thought Bible Jesus should be enough
Natural Selection
Observed nuked planet
Knew Mars
ACT 2 character has normal response to charge in life
Turning point 2: Agrees to find Tanya a mate
Romantic Experiment
ACT 3: character rethinks journey and makes real change to solve things
Laptop message
Turning point 3: allows Saints to Jam
Secretly
want parable movie
Russian + American peace makers
Entertaining for Heaven bored
Save Blue Planet
Got to have saints actors
ACT 4 resoultion
Break up
Told go fly kite, but no wind
ACT of GOD = wind = kite fly = Tanya learns she tested
Bird Dance
hands
Inciting Incident – open to new ways
ACT 2 Jet home new year reflections
Saints>Jesus>SPIRIT>CREATOR
DEBATE INTERNE VS NAUTUAL SELECTION
SEXUAL BONDING FAILING
Creator CONCERNED EXTINCTION per MARS
experiment
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Edward Brown deeper level
I will right profound movie and it will change world
I learned need to use all chararacter or plant set ups
Swu wim Deeper Layer
CREATOR
SURFACE: romantic experiment of total opposites
UNDERNEATH trying to find out how negotiate to Go giving, avoid nuclear extinction, promote Russian and American advocates for mke love not war
TANYA
Surface: looking for life time romantic lover
Underneath: looking for father/active parent for teen son TOLYA
GEORGE
Surface: looking for life romantic partner
Underneath: looking for aeordymic design to win mackinaw
PUTIN
Surface: looking for water drag reduction to build ships
Underneath: 200 mph torpedos/ hypersonic missiles
IVAN
Surface: looking for hermit gold prospector
Underneath: kill bomber of his family
IRINA
Surface: gf/helper to IVAN
Underneath: looking for neglected nuke bomb
TOLYA
Surface: checking out GEORGE as romantic prospect
UNDERNETH finding GEORGE’s UFO and rocket experience
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edward Brown outline 1
this program is well organized and following it will get my movie made
I learned some insgiths. had done this before. in other vlassese. i really got to pin this up probably beats on foam board. And then review all previous classes to get the depth
SWU WIM outline 1
Beginning: Where does the
character start?
Inciting incident: What propels
them on their journey?Turning Point 1: A major twist that locks them into a conflict nye kiss
Tanya starts to Moscow Kremlin NYE Ball to vamp billionaire Boiris per glamor of Catherine the Great’s Palace
Review on train: classes, winning gold Leaf, suitors who split when PG, influential but boring, her Fathers and Sons needs
Ball where Boris refuses to dance, Tanya refuses marriage, vamps Putin, but not kissed new years Eve
TANYA depressed open to new approach
Act 2 plane ride home/divines
Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: A
twist that causes everything to change but keeps the character on the same
journey.On jet home tanya goes thru depression to acceptance new Year changes but too late for MIDnight Kiss
Then at home gets Call from George. Neogiate, compromise, go for Midnight Kiss. Make it.
Act 3:
Act 3: The character rethinks
their journey and makes a real change to solve things.
Turning Point 3: Another major
twist that takes them to the biggest conflict.Tanya tests valentine per George
Researches George
Helps George get more organized per building, calendar, grooming, habits and learn to train her students too
Meets George Red Square but dismisses him as childish
Act 4 bird dance and partner ship
Act 1 George
NYE building boat, flags hanging, rejects party Anna
Inciting incident: prays for romantic partner
Deprepressed
Inciting Incident loud email from”Tanya”
Act 2
Act 2: The character has a
“normal response” to this change in their lives.
Turning Point 2 / Midpoint: A
twist that causes everything to change but keeps the character on the same
journey.Calls Tanya
Negotiate MNNYE kiss to meet
Turning point Tanya in Siberia!
Reluctant to go because be vamped
Wound: hurt because women take his pleasing forgranted
Also stunning women conceited
But Tanya sailor, fit, dad researcher , prayer answered
NYE break out year
Kiss at last NYE midnight
Act 3
Act 3: The character rethinks
their journey and makes a real change to solve things.
Turning Point 3: Another major
twist that takes them to the biggest conflict.George passes Valentine test
Gets serious but locked out of building, locked up for driving without license, misses deadlines, messy habits, but becomes Tanya project after Anna writes him off. And shapes up. Meets Tanya face to pretty face and is dismissed
going to show Tanya dragon kite as dragons are ufos
Maybe a gift
Told go home
4th Act Climax: The ultimate
experience/expression of this conflict.
Resolution: Their world has
changed. How did they end up after going through this journey?ACT 4
George flys kite, attracts females, maybe mothers with kids looking for father/parent Tanya realizes she funked test, no Czarina, bird dance, hands as partners.
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Edward Brown attract actors support characters
I am catchingup after being off 10 days
I learned got to consider the roles for subtext
Swu wim supporting characters
Name:
Role:
Main
purpose:
Value:Jesus
Role: biped culture interpreter/champion
Main Purpose: challenge Creator to do “right” by bipeds
And illustrate Major Teachings
Value: makes exercise/experiment in religious context
Saints
Role: case workers for Tanya, cheering squad
Main Purpose: urge and finagle Creator to help
Value: humor comic sidekicks
SPIRIT
Role: voice of change adaptation, Evolution rules
Main Purpose: champion life’s adaptations
Value: represents context of evolution life rules to win or lose
Victor
Role: Tanya’s Father
Researcher for hypersonic missiles and torpedoes
Main Purpose: invent non-defense weapon for Putin
Value: conflict for family moving to America
Ivan and Irena
Role: dramatic contrast couple vs George and Tanya
Role: Tanya’s ex husband and antagonist to George
Main Purpose: hate filled search leads to final confrontation
Value: represents destructive energy
Irena
Role: Ivan’s lover and partner who critizes Ivan’s blind hatred
Value: contrasts Ivan and is shredder set up threat later
TOLYA
Role: early teen son of Tanya and Ivan, “Bellamy”
Main Purpose: sounding board and questioner and critic of adults
Value: shows coming of age help from George and Mom’s alterego
Vincent:
Role: George’s right hand worker/friend for years, “Bellamy”
Main Purpose: sounding board, critic, and shows how Black needs help
Putin
Role: ruler
Main Purpose: global threat per hypersonic
Value: ULTIMATE ANTAGONIST
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Edward Brown character to attrreact actor profile 2
guts of serices
learned too much, need to summerized
Swu wim profile 2
Hiding something
Afraid to say
Secret
Lying
Luring/seducing
Withholding
Being polite
PlottingCreator
Making a parable movie
Secret: knows George’s beyonder background
Witholding powers
Plotting for future Russia vs America
Tanya
Hiding: family past
Secret: Grandma died
Luring/seducing George to stay
Plotting to get department position
GEORGE
Hiding wind tunnel interest
Secret: knows Berkly hypersonic
Withholding past
Luring/ seducing Kid to go to America
Plotting to win Mackinaw
INtruque
Hidden
agendas
Competition
ConspiracyCreator
Build up Tanya and George to stop war
Competition: mankin’s killer instinct
Conspiracy: Saints and crew
Tanya
Hidden agenda: keep George in Siberia
Do in burecrat killed Grandma
Competition: ANNA, Mackinaw
Conspiriacy: use Grandpa
GEORGE
Hidden agenda find out hypersonic
Competition: FSB
Conspriacy Berkley
Flaw
Overdoing things
Cowardice
Can’t look at their fears
Poor decision making
Over-confidence
Gives up easily
Undervalues themselves
Can’t take risks
Says the wrong thingThat flaw is going to show up any time they are under stress.
Creator
Scared to interfere
TANYA
Over structured
Undervalues self
Risk avoidance
Orders others
GEORGE
Undervalues self
Poor decision making
Avoidance
Disorganized
Will window surf waste time procastinate
Values
Family
Duty
Love
Loyalty
Honesty
Being your best
Fame
Intelligence
Winning
Or 100 other values that may
fit this character better.Creator
Concern for life, awarding Go Giving
Tanya
Intelligence, getting power/$
Romance forever
Dancing
structure
George
Kids/pleasing women
Creativity/solving problems
Sailing/winning MacKenaw
Dilemmas
CREATOR
INTERVENE OR NOT
TANYA
GO WITH FLAWED LOVER WITH PROMISE
Siberia or Detroit
GEORGE
Detroit vs Siberia
Trust Siberian Siren vs known fun
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edward brown charactors that attract actors
I learned need many facets to make attractive character
hope to catch up after being shut down
Tanya
Love interest
35 years, long fine hair, fit , strong legs and butt, curves, emotive face, giggle charm
Vamp, charmer + tough bitch, believer, structured, organized, in-box
WANT ROMANCE FOREVER, needs to be controlling Czarina vs bossed
Wound: drunken husband, males want sex but not fatherhood, grandmother died after being in prison for teaching, want to be sure George is ONE
Likability: spunky, smart, not in for money,
Relatability
Tanya likability
Loves son, father, rejects sex rejects money, long trip, winning contest
Tanya relatability
Wants more than live, reproduce, work die. Wants fun adventure romance
Tanya Empathy
Left on dance floor ignored
Traveled distance, stranded in city,
Prayer, repremands Son for being male chinists
Need dilemma Moscow or ????;
Break out/ bordome/ new year new life new lover
Want to succeed because of innate competency
Female in male word
George
Suitor and spy and transformer
55 old white hair fat
Adaptable , ropes, winning sailor, recovering scientist, creative out of box, beyonder, Romantic, charmer, solutions, slob, vampable, disorganized
Wound: ex tried to steal son, but good partner, in boring trade, afraid of attached to kid and forced out
GEORGE likability
More than sex, values dream, wonder of women
Dreamer
Seeks partner,
Helps her with life: mouse, house, art, take her places, bathroom, cook, food, massage, health cure, mold,
Top sailor, top roofer,
Get cat, helps roofers, helps Rita,
GEORGE relatability
Break out
More than live, reproduce, work, die
Want dream, fun, adventure, romance
GEORGE disdtress\empathy
Locked out, locked up, in debt, bills, messy, health, disorganized, teeth, truck, overwhelmed
Bored, not rewarding challenge, lacks game plan strategy, not pro active but passive
Creator
Concerned experimenter who indirectly coaches thru others
Can take any form, but plays Father role , Acts of God
Super but limited powers, concerned, reluctant to intervene as children should grow up
Challenge promoting Go Giving practice
Wants to save biped from extinction, promote Go Giving
Needs biped agents to convince or parable series
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Edward Brown WIM audience connect to characters
This can make or break audiences
Likability:
Relatability:Empathy
Tanya likability
Loves son, father, rejects sex rejects money, long trip, winning contest
Tanya relatability
Wants more than live, reproduce, work die. Wants fun adventure romance
Tanya Empathy
Left on dance floor ignored
Traveled distance, stranded in city,
Prayer, repremands Son for being male chinists
Need dilemma Moscow or ????;
Break out/ bordome/ new year new life new lover
Want to succeed because of innate competency
Female in male word
GEORGE likability
More than sex, values dream, wonder of women
Dreamer
Seeks partner,
Helps her with life: mouse, house, art, take her places, bathroom, cook, food, massage, health cure, mold,
Top sailor, top roofer,
Get cat, helps roofers, helps Rita,
GEORGE relatability
Break out
More than live, reproduce, work, die
Want dream, fun, adventure, romance
GEORGE disdtress\empathy
Locked out, locked up, in debt, bills, messy, health, disorganized, teeth, truck, overwhelmed
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Edward Brown character intruque
do process to get winner script
Learned by filling in blanks = results unwexpected
Creator
Hidden Agendas
Make Parable movie from romantic experiment
Russia Tanya + American George = national speakers for peace
Experiment = how make love not war
Competition
Human stupidity
Conspiracy
Experiment
Spirit collaborator
Help couple to mate
SECRETS
Experiment to stop war
Knows George recovering scientist would be interested in hypersonic
Knows George draft dodger against war
Knows George father strength
Knows Putin wants upper threat
Maybe knows UFOs
Knows Mars nuked to extinction
Deception
Quietly intervenes
Acts like on own so faith is challenge vs conform
Keeping GEORGE a plant set up
Unspoken Wound
Letting Jesus be crucified so could be brought back from dead
Not intervening, not trying persuasion on freewill Mars etc
Secret Identity
GOD
PASSION
Surprising faithful/unfaithful
Mischievous
Pro Life
GEORGE
Hidden Agenda
Learn how to get more sail power
Win Mackinaw
Build Trimaran
Win First Mate
Solve Problems
Competition
Self Bad Habits
Other racers
Ivan
FSB
Tanya/Tolya
Conspiracy
Lure Tanya to Detroit
Learn hypersonic
Woo Tanya
Shape up
Roof in Siberia
Learn flat roofs
Change public to back Tanya
Stop War
Run for Governor
EMP protection
Podcast
Go-Giver social media
Deception
Becomes spy for Berkley
Plots to win Tolya to win over Mom Tanya
Kite test
Unspoken Wound
Marriage breakup so COMMITMENT SHY
Anna party fun sexy fun
Father parent denied so reluctant to reenlist
Secret Identity/Back Ground
Recovering Scientist
Make it Rain
Top Sailor
Problem Solver
Neighborhood Politician
Anti-Gravity
Space launch
Mexico Adventure/research
Passion/Goals
Sailing
Building Trimaran
Winning Mackinaw
Life Long Romantic Partner
Solving Problems
Traits
Messy
Unorganized
FREEDOM
Problem Solver
Romantic
Sailor
Adaptive
Go Giver
Pussy whipped
Tatianna
Hidden Agenda
Czarina over men/ Dept head/ control
Romantic Forever Lover
Find father parent for son
Competition
Men who want ornament trophy wife
Other women like ANNA
men who just want sex, split when PG, not father types
Conspiracy
Lure George to Novosibirsk
Keep George in Novosibirsk
Become Department head
Become Governor Lt
Qualify George
Deception
Goals: Dance, father parent, romantic, adaptable
Wanting Power Czarina
Secret Wound
Husband non-father
Interested mostly in sex
Split when got PG again
Secret ID/Background
Vamp
Likes spend men’s money
Grandmother gave DIAMONDS
Great Grandfather prospector/Believers
PASSIONS
Waltz
Czarina
Vamp
Trait
Vamp
Schemer
Czarina
Go Getter
Romantic
Structured/Neat Obsessed
. What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?
“Love interest” Sexy vamp who rules in male world by discipline and listening
Who wants forever romance
Trying to beyond class room and dance to be administrator
22. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?
Goes from go getter to go giver :
Proposes deal: Moscow, tourist, Siberia with sailing on Ob Sea and low drag or back to Detroit
3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the script?
Compromises for Moscow, qualifies George, dilemma , go to Mac
3. tells Anna off cites Dreams, tricks Tanya into recognizing him as PhD in romance, makes transformation of messy to neat
4. How was the role introduced in a way that sold it to an actor?
Spurns suitor, rejects Billionaire, will explore slob roofer from Detroit
5. What is this character’s emotional range?
Despair, glee, calculating,
6. What subtext did the actor play?
Knows about George but sees if he honestly relates about past GFs and misadventures
Plans to vamp him to Siberia
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6. conceals his other relationships,
7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character had?
Son George ballet girls father ex
8 unique voice presented by barginingi, son, Boris , prayer
9. What made this character special and unique?
Vamp that prominent men seek , but turns to slob roofer but romantic from Detroit
How Subtext = Plot
CREATOR
Romantic Experiment
Interfere with nuke launch
Promote George + Tanya = speakers/governor/prophets/social activists
Movie is parable for audience/world
Promote avoid Mars
1. An active Creator that explains and prompts life and evolution is huge role
Plus Creator is fun mischievous amused
Trying to save planet from its free will bipeds
Favors faithful, but allows JOB testing
2. He initiates action and somewhat controls it
3. Entrance, controlling Saints, comments, wind, allows Saints to pro active roles
4. All plead for Creator who is teaching other failed planet
5. Humor, disgust, anger
6. Secret Russia vs America set up, Tolya as videographer, getting Tolya a father,
Wound: allowing Jesus to be crucified
7. Sophia, Spirit, Jesus
8. Demonstration of power per saints, test subjects, experiment
9. Knows all but can not control it
GEORGE
Messy unorganized = problems = journey
Takes care of self more: health, weight, teeth, groom, clothes
Demands partner, not Czarina
Connects with Tanya as both romantics, sailors, adventurous
Also, realizes synergy possibilities
NOT ONLY SEX
1 mischievous playful male lover who is adaptive, need to make him a role model for:
Male point of view, good father material, teach Tanya’s son Tolya
Like Tanya wants Forever Romance
2. he is proactive lover who makes trip to Tanya’s Siberia
3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the script?
3. tells Anna off cites Dreams, tricks Tanya into recognizing him as PhD in romance, makes transformation of messy to neat, fat to fit per Tanya’s coaching
4. How was the role introduced in a way that sold it to an actor?
4. mocks going to Moscow, goes, creative negotiating, ANNA
5. What is this character’s emotional range?
5. really stoked won mac, depressed Anna left, vamped but recovers
6. What subtext did the actor play?
6. conceals his other relationships, how good father, how fought matedor, Alice
7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character had?
7. Tanya, Vince, Little Voice, Alice
8. How was this character’s unique voice presented?
7. prayer, adaptive: valentine, kiss new year, flyer, need poem
9. What made this character special and unique?
9. adaptive, almost a beyonder, prayer, resists being VAMPED, capable of growth, helps structured Tanya to go Out-of-Box
TANYA
ROMANTIC
NOT ORNAMENT
Structured helps George get organized
Neatness helps George
Go Giver transforms to Go Giver
Makes a deals to meet face to pretty face, bird dances to be silly playful, makes deal to be synergy partner
. What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?
“Love interest” Sexy vamp who rules in male world by discipline and listening
Who wants forever romance
Trying to beyond class room and dance to be administrator
22. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?
Goes from go getter to go giver :
Proposes deal: Moscow, tourist, Siberia with sailing on Ob Sea and low drag or back to Detroit
3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the script?
Compromises for Moscow, qualifies George, dilemma , go to Mac
3. tells Anna off cites Dreams, tricks Tanya into recognizing him as PhD in romance, makes transformation of messy to neat
4. How was the role introduced in a way that sold it to an actor?
Spurns suitor, rejects Billionaire, will explore slob roofer from Detroit
5. What is this character’s emotional range?
Despair, glee, calculating,
6. What subtext did the actor play?
Knows about George but sees if he honestly relates about past GFs and misadventures
Plans to vamp him to Siberia
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6. conceals his other relationships,
7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character had?
Son George ballet girls father ex
8 unique voice presented by barginingi, son, Boris , prayer
9. What made this character special and unique?
Vamp that prominent men seek , but turns to slob roofer but romantic from Detroit
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Edward Brown subtext characers
I will focus and acheive mostest
learned need to explore subtext more
Creator
Schemer, Manipulative, Crafty
Devine Protective Father
Wound: allowing SON to be crucified
Aspiration: while Evolution picks winners and losers, loving wins
Tanya
Structured Seducer, Schemer, Devious
Mother, professor of world culture, ballet instructor
Wound: impregnators flee, not recognized as scholar
Aspiring Czarina and PhD candidate
Needs to be published
Wants academic recognition
Passion/dream Waltz at romantic Ball
George
Unstructured Adaptive, experimenter, problem solver, ignores self interests in favor of women
Fought draft, antigravity, rocket scientist,
Roofer to support family
Unset of marriage break up
Passion/Dream: design/build win Mackinaw
Freedom signified by sail
Great father
Recovering scientist
Wound: marriage break up, wary, wary of being used by woman as father then dumped/or impossible
Wants romantic Lover partner forever
Act 1 sop
VICTOR watches live cremation, wonders what daughter Tanya did to get him meeting Putin for funding
Tanya: Suitor pleads, rejects Boris as un-romantic
Prays for adaptive PhD obedient forever lover but believes not possible with men
CREATOR: upset by self nuclear disaster by techie bipeds
Bugged by Case worker saints to find Tanya forever Lover
Big fight with SON, realizes parables teach longer than mythical miracles
Decides on parable romance of opposites who both desire Romance
GEORGE: available after break up with ANNA who mocks his building trimaran
ANNA mocks messy place as being un-productive
GEORGE depressed, totally bummed, prays for romantic PARTNER
Act 2 journey willing to make changes
Tanya prays per Grace, Tolya mocks
George phones
Qualifying each other
Live on river, Grand River
Tanya impressed by diner, waltzing, making rose perfume
George impressed Tanya gorgeous and sailor on Dad’s Trimaran
Agrees to drive fast to Grand Rapids to kiss at midnight/staggers as Tanya in Siberia
TURNING POINT
NEGOTIATIONS TO MEET: Detroit vs Siberia
Time zone NYE chats
FSB report Senorita Toreo sword fight possible killing
Tanya proposes Moscow, concedes with Vamp plot
Meet Kiss deadline
Act 3 build up for face to pretty face meeting Red Square 10 days after Mackinaw
Tanya has rational doubts if George good prospect
Valentine Challenge
George Locked out of his messy building, Tanya coaches
GEORGE coaches Tanya on research Old Believers for Doctoral thesis
George illegal to drive, missed appointment, Tanya coaches organize office
George uses political connections to get bureaucratic help
Coaches Tanya to get promoted
George studies yacht racing, taking a flyer
Rankin lets go to help Molly and john cook to race mackinaw
Anna declares George project, buit joins Rankin to race
Wind shift flyer win 1<sup>st</sup>, beats Wind Surfer, Rankin 3<sup>rd</sup>
GEORGE talking to ANNA,TANYA face calls sees situation, Molly summons to first place stage, dies, take flyer on Tanya
Act 4 face to Pretty Face Red Square
Tanya vamps George
George recovers, plays waitress
Leaves to fly kite
Waitress tell Tanya she has been played
George refuses to be her knight and bow down
Bird Challenge
Partnership vows to Go To Ob Sea , but first Art Museum
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Edward Brown actor attractors
need to make great roles toget great actors
CREATOR
1. An active Creator that explains and prompts life and evolution is huge role
Plus Creator is fun mischievous
Trying to save planet from its free will bipeds
Favors faithful, but allows JOB testing
2. He initiates action and somewhat controls it
3. Entrance, controlling Saints, comments, wind, allows Saints to pro active roles
4. All plead for Creator who is teaching other failed planet
5. Humor, disgust, anger
6. Secret Russia vs America set up, Tolya as videographer, getting Tolya a father,
Wound: allowing Jesus to be crucified
7. Sophia, Spirit, Jesus
8. Demonstration of power per saints, test subjects, experiment
9. Knows all but can not control it
GEORGE
1 mischievous playful male lover who is adaptive, need to make him a role model for:
Male point of view, good father material, teach Tanya’s son Tolya
Like Tanya wants Forever Romance
2. he is proactive lover who makes trip to Tanya’s Siberia
3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the script?
3. tells Anna off cites Dreams, tricks Tanya into recognizing him as PhD in romance, makes transformation of messy to neat, fat to fit per Tanya’s coaching
4. How was the role introduced in a way that sold it to an actor?
4. mocks going to Moscow, goes, creative negotiating, ANNA
5. What is this character’s emotional range?
5. really stoked won mac, depressed Anna left, vamped but recovers
6. What subtext did the actor play?
6. conceals his other relationships, how good father, how fought matedor, Alice
7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character had?
7. Tanya, Vince, Little Voice, Alice
8. How was this character’s unique voice presented?
7. prayer, adaptive: valentine, kiss new year, flyer, need poem
9. What made this character special and unique?
9. adaptive, almost a beyonder, prayer, resists being VAMPED, capable of growth, helps structured Tanya to go Out-of-Box
Tanya
. What about this role would cause an actor to want to be known for it?
“Love interest” Sexy vamp who rules in male world by discipline and listening
Who wants forever romance
Trying to beyond class room and dance to be administrator
22. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in your story?
Goes from go getter to go giver :
Proposes deal: Moscow, tourist, Siberia with sailing on Ob Sea and low drag or back to Detroit
3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the script?
Compromises for Moscow, qualifies George, dilemma , go to Mac
3. tells Anna off cites Dreams, tricks Tanya into recognizing him as PhD in romance, makes transformation of messy to neat
4. How was the role introduced in a way that sold it to an actor?
Spurns suitor, rejects Billionaire, will explore slob roofer from Detroit
5. What is this character’s emotional range?
Despair, glee, calculating,
6. What subtext did the actor play?
Knows about George but sees if he honestly relates about past GFs and misadventures
Plans to vamp him to Siberia
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6. conceals his other relationships,
7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character had?
Son George ballet girls father ex
8 unique voice presented by barginingi, son, Boris , prayer
9. What made this character special and unique?
Vamp that prominent men seek , but turns to slob roofer but romantic from Detroit
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Edward Brown) Actor attractors for (Movie Title).
Movie Title: Shakespeare in Love
Lead Character Name: Viola
1. Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role? Playing iconic stage role interpretation
2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie? A romantic beautiful protptype of Juliet LOVE interest protagonist partner IT IS HER STORY OF FINING LOVE AND WISHING WILLIAM WELL IN FUTURE THE MUSE
3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie? Plays Romeo, fools Will, then romantic love challenges but learns script DOES BIG STAGE AS HERSELF
4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor? Infatuated with poetry BEAUTIFUL DESIRABLE TAKES ROLE AS ACTOR kENT
5. What is this character’s emotional range? CHEERS, GLEE, TEARS , TRAGIC
6. What subtext can the actor play? PLAYS MALE, PLAYS SECRET LOVER, PLAYS ROMEO WHEN SHE IS FEMALE MODEL FOR JULIET
7. What’s the most interesting relationships this character has? WITH WILL, nurse, Westli, actors
8. How is this character’s unique voice presented? TALKS OF LOVE, APPRECIATES BEYOND NORMAL ASPIRATIONS
9. What makes this character special and unique? ROMANTIC BUT REALIST , GIVING AS HEALS WILLS HEART, LOVING
10. (Fill in a scene that shows the character fulfilling much of the Actor Attractor model.) WHEN SHE ASKS WILL HOW HE FILLS ABOUT VIOLA WHEN SHE IS VIOLA / PLAYING JUIET
William Shakespeare
1. Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role? Playing iconic stage role interpretation
2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie? CLASSIC ROLE PLUS GREAT WINNING SCRIPT SHOWS TALENTS
3. What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie? WRITES SCRIPT MIRRORING HIS LOVE AFFAIR, BIG DANCE, SWORD FIGHT, LOVE MAKING, CLIMBS VINE, WOOS HER WITH POETRY
4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor? WORKING ON TRI DREAMING OF San Diego in winter, rejects sexy ANNA
5. What is this character’s emotional range? CHEERS, GLEE, TEARS , TRAGIC
6. What subtext can the actor play? PLAYS SCRIPT WRITER AND DIRECTOR WHEN KNOWS ROMEO ACTOR IS VIOLA
8. How is this character’s unique voice presented? Poetry,
7.What’s the most interesting relationship ps this character has? Viola, actors, producer,
9. What makes this character special and unique? Adaptable, romantic, proactive lover/wooer, great writer
Creator
1. Why would an actor WANT to be known for this role? Big POWERFUL CHARACTER
2. 2. What makes this character one of the most interesting characters in the movie EXPLAINS GOD AND FREE WILL TO SELF DESTRUCT, HISTORY OF MANKIND VIA GODS, SALVATION FOR MANKIND — MAYBE
3. . What are the most interesting actions the Lead takes in the movie POWERS TO MANIPULATE SAINTS, PUT TOGETHER PROPECTTIVE LOVERS, NUKE CONCERN. MNIPULATE
4. Introduced by another planet then float down with ragtime, mocking but in command
5. Emotional range: concern, mocking, upset, thunder, glee,
6. Subtext: knows answers others don’t, plans to make movie series, Rus vs USA, parables are the human path
7. Introduced: as powerful source of life via Jesus, spirit, Saints, lovers,
8. Unique voice mocking
9. Special cares despite human failings
George
1. why want role? Comic everday man who transitions
2. why interesting: adaptable, romantic, vampable, will go for it
3. most interesting actions: propose kissing at midnight, valentine, winning sailor, Alice, Senorita, not just sex
4. How is this character introduced that could sell it to an actor? Working on tri, mocking ever going to Moscow, rejecting Anna., maybe arrival of glitteria and Tanya
5. Emotional range: argumentative, despair, joy, calculating
6. Subtext: emotions not shown verbally or implied
7. Most interesting relationships: Tanya, God, little voice, Vincent, Son
8. How unique voice presented: mischievous, creative, little voice
9. Special and unique: history, sailor, adaptive, romantic, vampable, believer, make rain, slob, messy, not care for self enough
Tanya
1. Why actor want role: play vamp, woman in man’s world, want to rule, romantic
2. Why interesting? Vamp, beauty, standards, romantic, Czarina, concern world, cares for son/father, dancer,
3. Most interesting actions: refuse Boris, teach ballet, world culture, NYE kiss, researches George, rejects as old, learns to bird
4. Emotion range: glee, despair, energy, focused, taker
5. How introduced: train, ball
6. Subtext:
7. Interesting relationships: George, Dad, son, ex, ballet class, Putin
8. How unique voice presented? Orders,
9. Special ‘n Unique: vamp, wants power, romantic, mother, daughter, schemer
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Edward Brown genre conventions
I am confident if I focus I will write, sell, have fun and prosper
RomCom/Divine Fig
Creator sets up romantic experiment of total opposites to see if there are parable Go Giving lessons to keep free will bipeds from nuking their blue planet to extinction as previously happened on red Mars.
“Romancing vs Extinction” or “Romancing Blue Planet or Extinction”
Romcom conventions
female not in it for moneyMale not in it for sex
Something must keep them apart until they transform
Divine Fi conventions
Demonstrate cosmic powers
But life forms have free will
So left with persuasion to save blue planet from extinction
Act 1
Live cremation of nuke project director
Tanya rejects diamonds and marriage to billionaire
Convinces Putin her father has low drag research
Brit, Korean, Chinese spies try to lip read
Ivan, tanya’s Ex husband kills moonshiner who won-t pay bribe
Creator signs on for parable romance to teach negotiations and making Go Getting deals for all
Act 2
George splits with Anna wanting more than primary great frequent sex
Ivan fails to catch ghost
Creator set up George and Tanya and allows proactive jiggering cupid matchmaking
Worried abut extinction like Mars and no dad families
ACT 3
Gradient of change
Ivan kidnaps FSB director and discovers Alexei has nuke bomb
George forced to be neater, more organized, healthier
American spy trying for hyperonic info
Tanya does valentine test, and researches George and finds favor
Act 4
Face to pretty face in Red Square
Tanya rejects George
Ivan’s gf meets with Asian agent
George goes fly kite and tanya realize she failed test
George and Tanya Decide to go to Siberia to explore romance
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Edward Brown 4 act transformation structure
write sell rewards
concept Creator connects two total opposites to learn parable go giving lessons that can be used to save planet
Main conflict: Detroit roofer wants professor Tanya to come to Detroit, she laughs and tries to vamp George to come to Siberia — thus neogiations via Go Giving
Tanya Czarina who wants to rule, prissy , structured, VAMP
George: creative mess who is too easily vamped and tries to please while not taking care of himself
Creator concerned fewer believers, fewer dad as partents, and nukes on path to recreate mars like extinctions
ACT 3 20-30 PAGES – WITH MIDPOINT CHANGE, PROFOUND MOMNETS GIVES US NEW WAYS
HERO MUST RETHINK AND CREATE NEW PLAN
Have multiple insights why things not working
See old ways won’t work anymore
Must up their game, which means they must change
Now hero has new plan which they never did before
Could be training, now partners, new actions never took before
All is lost
ACT 4 TEST THE CHANGES PROVES NEW WAYS
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WIM lesson 3 character transformations
Edward Brown transformation
I am completely capable of dramatic transformation of charactersw
Creator gos from hardly no intervention to romantic experiment with rigging to making parable movie
Old ways only minor interventions as let evolution pick winners and losers
Did try prphets, Jesus
Jesus was powerful because his parables
New
Intervene as parable makers with romance experiment
Hen keeps rigging help
Creator internally realizes need to intervene or his creation will self destructs so Creator creates Go giving experiment
TANYA goes from vamp seeking to be Czarina to partner with Goeroge in Detiot
Old ways
Self centered Czarina
Vamp
Used to men fawning over her
Demands George live in Siberia
Go getter
New
Learns to compromise
Even look out for George as Go Giver
Decides to mive to Detroit despite getting administrative University job in Siberia
Tanya realizes if she wants unique creative lover rather than toady, Tanya must respect and go Givie please George
Stuck in rut George goes from disorganized slob to neat organized taking a flyer on a vamp and winning partner
Old ways
Slobs,
Ignores deadlines
Place messy
Ungroomed
Too vampable
To much ignores self for women and others
New ways
Organized office
Meets deadlines
Grooms self
Better habits
Loses weight, gets fit
Realizes cannot be vamp slave, must demand partner
Part of go giving is loving self maybe before others
I learned listing character elements clarifies
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Edward Brown transformation
I am completely capable of dramatic transformation of charactersw
Creator gos from hardly no intervention to romantic experiment with rigging to making parable movie
Old ways only minor interventions as let evolution pick winners and losers
Did try prphets, Jesus
Jesus was powerful because his parables
New
Intervene as parable makers with romance experiment
Hen keeps rigging help
Creator internally realizes need to intervene or his creation will self destructs so Creator creates Go giving experiment
TANYA goes from vamp seeking to be Czarina to partner with Goeroge in Detiot
Old ways
Self centered Czarina
Vamp
Used to men fawning over her
Demands George live in Siberia
Go getter
New
Learns to compromise
Even look out for George as Go Giver
Decides to mive to Detroit despite getting administrative University job in Siberia
Tanya realizes if she wants unique creative lover rather than toady, Tanya must respect and go Givie please George
Stuck in rut George goes from disorganized slob to neat organized taking a flyer on a vamp and winning partner
Old ways
Slobs,
Ignores deadlines
Place messy
Ungroomed
Too vampable
To much ignores self for women and others
New ways
Organized office
Meets deadlines
Grooms self
Better habits
Loses weight, gets fit
Realizes cannot be vamp slave, must demand partner
Part of go giving is loving self maybe before others
I learned listing character elements clarifies
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Edward Brown intentional Lead characters
Write a blockbuster movie series to create trimaran sailing and world influence
I am completely committed to having my characters deliver powerfully on my concept
Creator setups up romantic experiment of total opposite prissy structured Siberian professor Tanya with creative but undisciplined messy Detroit roofer George. This fits concept that for these two uber romantics to get together, jit will take obviouslu negotiations and accommodation which it what will that for nuclear powers not to destroy earth’s protective uv ionosphere which happened on extinct Mars. Of course there is more.
Creator
Badgered by Tanya’s caseworker saints to find her a romantic lover, Creator setups parable experiment of making love to learn how make nuclear peace to save Blue Planet from being extinct Mars.
Creator is unique with god-like powers which are limited to persuasion via free-will biped
Tanya
Disciplined Siberian professor who turns down unromantic billionaire’s marriage proposal, self-centered Tanya seeks to be Czarina administrator at her University — rule men
Tanya is uniquely an effective vamp
George
While breaking up with classy sexy dame, George seeks synergy partner
While unfocused with no habits, Detroit roofer George conjures up unique creative solutions — except for his self
I learned to focus intentions more
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Edward Brown
if a good movie series: could encourage blue planet bipeds to not extinctish all life as Happened on Mars
RomCom/Divine Fi
Creator sets up romantic experiment of total opposites to see if there are parable lessons to keep free will bipeds from nuking their blue planet to extinction as previously happened on red Mars.
“Romancing vs Extinction” or “Romancing Blue Planet vs Extinction”
like strategy of pitch is Plato’s Idea of the Good which everything else flows
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Edward Brown
“I agree to the terms of this release form
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Edward Brown wrote 5 scripts hope to finish rewriting script and sell it
I love sailing, writing, dancing with charming mothers
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Edward Brown profound map
I learned I had intututively had most element but this put things in focus. And more rethinking.’
Title: Blue Planet Romance & Life Forever?
Screenplay by Edward Kilkenny Brown
(this is pilot for BW series)
1. Profound Truth: Creator’s cosmos has two rules for life: Self Preservation and Preservation of Species
Blue Planet prophet, Jesus, translated this to “Love Your neighbor as yourself”
There is an implied third rule: prospective lovers adapt for romance forever. AND Ukraine nuclear powers adapt for peace or Blue Planet becomes extinct Red Mars.
2. Transformable Journey
Faced that Jesus’s parables are increasingly considered mythical tales, Creator adapts to create a parable binge television series of two total opposite uber romantics, prissy structured Siberian professor, Tatianna, and slot chaotic Detroit roofer, George.
Thus, this pilot is about total opposites: Siberian Tanya and Detroit George adapting/transforming enough “to meet face to pretty face” to explore being forever romantic partners.
This romantic comedy is in intrigue background of Tanya’s father secretly for Putin developing unstoppable hypersonic missile and FSB, new name for KGB, tactical killings.
Tanya’s Old Ways
Tanya vamps for short term five-abortion fun living off her husband’s alimony
George’s Old Ways
While slob, messy, and disorganized, George shapes up enough to weekend party with classy sexy dame
Creator’s Old Ways
While answers prayers sometimes, Creator basically likes his game of Evolution where he “lets it play” for to save Sapiens’ from their bad behavior consequences would make him an enabler.
JOURNEY
Romantic courtship transforms totally opposite prospective lovers to power sharing roles of playful partnership
New Ways:George goes from being “pussy whipped” to being self assertive for his key values of playful and sailing for long term relation.
However, to shape up enough for Tanya, “World Class Woman,” George cleans up his act by daily grooming, walking, eating smart, walking, taking meds, brushing teeth, and goes from disorganized slob to driving around to see bad roofs and mailing letters to digitally marketing.
Plus, courts and City inspectors force George to meet deadlines, keep shop clean, and no loose food for rats.
And while still vampable, George nixes non-sailing or unplayful women no matter how desirable.
Tanya goes from vamping to get her ways to being a compromising go-giver to George’s wants.
Plus, to qualify George as valid romantic prospect Tanya researches George’s finances, past romances, how good a father, AND qualifying tests, “Men will say anything and do a lot to go to bed with me, but how they act is the real test.”
Creator: To discover what it takes to stay romantically bonded, Creator increasingly lets Tanya’s case worker saints to play cupid to at least get George and Tanya together. Plus, Creator allows Blue Planet Sapiens to discover more on Mars so they will credibly believe intelligent beings killed themselves and all Red planet life.
Transformational Logline
While Tanya rejects billionaire’s marriage proposal and George rejects life of great weekend sex and cultured fun, both recognize the other as a playful romantic match, but must transform into go givers for Detroit roofer’s face meet Siberian professor’s pretty face to even explore future romantic life together.
3. Lead Characters: Tanya, George, Creator
Change agent is romantic prospect’s desire for romance, and Creator’s desire to parable teach with romantic adventure without preaching so Blue planet bipeds learn to negotiate to live.
Betraying Character: Maybe Tanya’s father who develops hypersonic missiles, and Tanya’s ex husband who wants to kill Tanya’s father, and later Tanya and George
Oppression: boredom, lack of life having meaning, bureaucracy as monster feeding of individuals whose roles limited be born, breed work die
4. Connect with audience at movie beginning
A. Relatability: maybe George’s problems of being disorganized and messy
Women desire to be more than ornaments but have sparkle of romance
Men want more than party partner but play partner with shared LIFE goals
B. Intrigue: secret development of hypersonic missiles and 200 mph torpedos
Tanya’s ghost grandfather who her ex-husband, Ivan, wants to kill and then Tanya
How will Creator transform Tanya and George be Russian vs United States peacemakers
How will Creator persuade bipeds not to nuke Blue Planet into extinct Mars
C. Empathy: Tanya’s search for a romantic lifetime lover
George’s search for life partner not just party girl
Tough romantic negotiations to meet
God’s trying to let Sapiens have free will but guide them
Tolya’s trying to mature with crazy adult examples
D. Likability
Tanya being gutty at Kremlin New Year’s Eve Ball by rejecting Billionaire’s diamond necklace and huge engagement ring and being stranded on dance floor and still getting a military jet escort home to Siberia.
George suffering personal defects and changing to be a strong better person.
Also George secretly tests Tanya the secret tester and convinces her to go from ruling Czarina to romantic partner
Saints relatable passionate advocates whose rock and roll gets fiddling George to “be a man and kiss the damn phone” before planet’s NYE time zone.
Jesus and Spirit ROLES
Creator’s SENSE OF HUMOR
Tanya’s ghost grandfather
E. Empathy: Tanya’s search for a romantic live lover
George’s search for life partner not just party girl
God’s trying to let Sapiens have free will but guide them
Tolya’s trying to mature with crazy adult examples
F. Likability
Tanya being gutsy at NYE Ball and adaptive
George suffering personal defects and changing
Also creative adapter, problem solver
Saints relatable passionate advocates
Jesus and Spirit ROLES
God SENSE OF HUMOR
5. GRADIENT OF CHANGE
Prospective Lovers adapt to connect
God adapts to save Earth by exploring romantic dynamics
Emotional Gradient
TANYA forced change from Kremlin New Year Eve Ball goes thru this on military jet home to Siberia
Denial: can’t believe Billionaire would not dance WITH HER
Angry: at not realizing her international library search found rich powerful men want an ornament
Bargaining: Saints and Divine forces owe her help as her family defended the faith against Bolsheviks and atheists
Depression: never find forever romantic lover as traditional prospects nyet
Acceptance: old ways failed, must be open to new
TANYA Desired Change
Excitement: God arranged phone call from George who describes such a potential romantic evening with dining, bubbly, dancing and her body covered with rose petals so when their bodies press together they make rose perfume. So excited living this in her imagination, she squirts her underpants.
DOUBT after they skype kiss last planet’s time zone NYE at Bora Bora, Tanya begins to have doubts if George really is smitten by her. So sends him Valentine present of red undies with rose petals. And waits to see if George has sent her any Valentine’s Day gift.
HOPE of qualifying George as future romantic. Tanya has hope when George sends to her care of University a video of a double gable building chain sawed into crude heart painted red with their initials and then blown up which gets giggly approval by female ballet and university staff.
Also, her research shows that George history of being great dad, romantic enough to challenge Torero to sword fight for hand of Senorita. Rejected non-sailor, Ex-girl friend Anna, is learning to jibe spinnaker. Da da.
IRONY DISCOURAGEMENT with George now fit, lean, well dressed and groomed, and guest strategist of winning mackinaw sailboat race, there is Awards Ceremony beer blast of 1000 happy souls. There, Tanya skypes sees George surrounded with many admiring busty women. Tanya really gets discouraged when George says he might not come to Moscow face to pretty face meet that now that she’s helped his marketing, George has of business to attend to.
COURAGE: since George is coming to Red Square, Tanya bravely plans to vamp George to come to Siberia
TRIUMPH: TANYA fails to vamp George as he fiddles with his dragon kite and dismisses him. Then Tanya realizes she failed George’s secret test. After play acting as playful birds, Tanya vows not to act like ruling Czarina but romantic partner. See ending where they agree to go to Novosibirsk Siberia to explore being life romantic lovers.
Gradiant 2 action
Set up New Years Eve Midnight Kiss
· January 1<sup>st</sup>, flown in by military jet to Moscow, Tanya’s father Dr. Victor Koslov , is ordered to watch “educational lesson” before he can get funding for his low drag research,
· Dr. Koslov wonders what his vampish daughter Tanya did the night before at Kremlin NYE ball. Did she dance with billionaire Boris who invited her. Months earlier, Boris was wowed at Russia’s annual talent competition where Tanya’s ballet class won.
· FSB agent laughs and orders Dr. Koslov’s neighboring nuclear project director cremated live as lesson to keep secrets — secret — for Dr. Koslov’s neighbor planned to sell secrets.
· Red Square NYE rowdy crowd out side palace. Inside Tanya enters Ball room. Voice overs say person you kiss at midnight NYE will affect your life rest of the year. Will Tanya and Boris kiss? If so, will oligarch Boris arrange for Tanya’s son, Tolya, get draft deferment and her father Victor get research funding?
· At NYE Kremlin Ball, Tanya rejects Boris’s diamond necklace and huge engagement ring because Tanya is not an ornament. Instead, she vamps Putin saying her father, Dr. Victor Koslov is researching drastic drag reduction. Putin orders General to fly Tanya home to Novosibirsk Siberia.
· On jet flight home, Tanya pleads for help finding romantic lover. So, her case worker Saints call in Jesus who calls in Spirit. Then all call in Creator to help Tanya find a forever romantic lover.
· Creator mocks “Blue Planet bipeds” for ignoring Evolution’s natural selection of sexual bonding to raise kids.
· Saints point out that Tanya’s impregnators split at prospect of being fathers, so, Tanya had five abortions. This fatherless raising of kids is common, growing, and causing young boys turning to crime or wasted lives.
· After Creator threatens Saints and demonstrates his power, Saints suggest Romantic Bonding. Saints and Jesus agree romance is most challenging form of Go-Giving. Jesus adds his “love your neighbor as yourself” parables are considered mythical stories.
· Creator counters that Green planet he just came from in another Galaxy, the competing bipeds nuked the electrical system so everything electrical fired: no transformers, no computers, no vehicles — so in short time all died except horse farmers, hunters and green tigers.
· Saints are shocked. Creator waves hand and former CIA director in video say it could happen on earth with 90% dead in a year. Saints shocked.
· Creator says could get worse, competing nuclear forces on Mars weakened the protective ionosphere so UV rays killed plants and small animals. Then the animals who ate them died. And with weaker ionosphere not holding in air, solar winds blew away a lot of air so water dried up. Red Planet became extinct dust and rock.
· If Russia and United States or China start nuking, earth’s protective ionosphere could be destroyed enough so life on Blue Planet becomes extinct.
· Then patron saint of lovers and sailors, Nicholas says, “well, let’s DO SIMPLE: find Tanya a romantic lover.”
· First, Creator frowns, then smiles, and asks “What do you bipeds do when you celebrate other than drink and eat?
· Saints, Jesus, and Creator hold hands and dance around alter. Creator changes into different alien forms. Suddenly lightening and thunder inside Cathedral with Creator back to traditional Father form.
· Creator proposes: “since romance is most challenging of Go Giving, let’s do an experiment of connecting two uber romantics, but totally opposites, to discover dynamics of negotiations, compromise and helping each other.
Then maybe those lessons can be used to defuse nuclear war and create prosperity.
And to engage you bipeds, let’s make this real life binge worthy parable TV series. And you saints can be shape shifter cupids. And sometime fixers.
· Saints wildly celebrate. Then patron saint of Divine Wisdom, Sophia asks “where can we find a romantic so foolish to put up with self-centered Tanya?”
· Creator: soon may be available a slob roofer from Detroit
JOURNEY Tanya and George negotiate to meet face to pretty face
· at new year’s eave midnights around globe’s time zones, Tanya and George negotiate how and when to meet “face to pretty face”
· at last romantic global spot, Bora Bora, they just kiss to seal deal of meeting after Mackinaw Sailboat race in July at Red Square.
· Before meeting, both have doubts. Tanya does more research on George. While Tanya prompts George to shape up before meeting, George ironically finds himself leaner, more handsome, better organized and making more roofing business money.
· Thus, George questions” why go to Moscow when I got things going good here.
· But skipper, who knowingly had heart problems, dies on winner stage and tells GEORGE,
“be a bold fool and don’t later regret not going
Pay Off at Red Square confrontation
· George and Tanya meet finally “face to pretty face.”
· Tanya tries to vamp George under her power
· And more specifically for George to go to Siberia.
· George tests her by flying kite to see if she is playful, for George believes playfulness wears better than aging beauty
· Tanya fails and George is ready to return to Detroit
· Then Tanya joins George play acting like bird couple
· They agree to be romantic synergy partners and go to Novosibirsk Siberia to explore more being romantic lovers forever
. How are the “Old Ways” Challenged?
A. Challenge through Questioning:
· Boris asks Tanya to marry but Tanya refuses because values romantic relationship vs being an ornament
· Tanya asks Saints for help and then transforms to realizing she must change herself to be more open getting a romantic mate
· Tanya challenges George to better groom, dress, eat, exercise, market
B. Challenge thru Counter Example
· George challenges Tanya to be playful like birds
· George challenges Tanya being sexy after beauty fades vs old charming playful woman who gets male attention
· FSB challenges Dr. Koslov to keep project secrets by cremating alive his neighboring project director who tries to sell nuke tech secrets
C. Challenge thru “Should World but Doesn’t”
· Saints challenge Creator that sex is no longer bonding parents
· Saints challenge Creator that the “BOOK” and Jesus’ parables are today still effective
D. Challenge through Living Metaphor
· New Year = new beginings
· NYE midnight kiss = attachment for coming year
· George mess disorganized life
· Building trimaran = freedom
· Valentine gift = cares for proswpect
· Skipper dying with Blue Flag first award = life is short , live fully, have no reqrets
· Tanya’s waltzing = romance participation
· Boris’ diamonds = wealth comfortable cage
· Birds and kite challenge = playfulness together in life
· Fingers interlocked = synergy joining of lives for more happiness
· Walking arm in arm vs holding hands = classy way to walk together affectionately but properly
8. How are You Presenting Insights through Profound Moments?
CONFLICT
· Tanya refuses diamonds and marriage to Billionaire for romance
· George refuses around global sex for new life partner
· Saints refuse to buckle to Creator because they champion real life results vs comfortable compliance
· Tanya and George always negotiate and compromise because insight they want same thing – romance partner
ACTION
· FSB cremates taletell project head as lesson keep secrets
· FSB Ivan kills moonshiner revealing insight he’s calmly a killer
· George changes course in mackinaw race as insight he is adaptable
· Tanya vamps as insight that’s her power game
· George tests Tanya with kite and bird dance as insight he values demonstratable action proofs vs verbal jabber
Irony
· Creator who believes let natural selection evolution pick winners decides to have parable TV series by connecting total opposites, Tanya and George
· While nations develop increasingly more deadly weapons for self defense, these same weapons can nuke the planet’s protective ionosphere so UV rays start domino extinction of all Earth’s life forms.
· Tanya’s shaping up George causes him to be desirable to competing women
· While ancients preached moral wisdom, to convert misbehavers, it takes modern media TV parable show.
9. What are the Most Profound Lines of the Movie?
· FSB after live cremation: “Secrets be Secret?”
VICTOR KOSLOV
· Welll, ah, Tolya –your Mom’s a vamp
TANYA
But, I’m not an economic cipher. This I know. This stone came from the earth. In fleeting decades, we’ll all return to earth.
TANYA throws back her hair, hands on hips:
TANYA PROUD VOICE
· Meantime — to live — Tolya’s mother must have romance of dance.
TANYA
· Saints help me. I want lifetime romantic lover. Not roommate waiting to bury the other.
TANYA LITTLE VOICE
· Hmmm –As I fly over petty quarrels below, I realize: I need not a sex mechanic, nor ritual wine nor ritual roses –instead I need a creative romantic!
GOD
· Well, my blue planet BIPEDS. I see you conned the Spirit and the KID
SAINT SOPHIA
· Hey, news flash, fossils show Sapiens beat monkeys eons ago But there’s trouble in paradise, blessed climaxes are with someone else’s exes
SAINT GEORGE
But many boys, like too short Vincent, can’t play round ball. So they’re easily recruited to sell drugs.
(beat)
Then to pay for drugs, their drug customers mug ‘n’ rob!
(beat)
And when the New Drug Sellers get busted, these New felons can’t get legitimate jobs. Good Jobs.
GOD
Okay crew, lets define the problem. Often Dads out door before Babes out of mom.
(beat)
Worse,40 per cent of your marriages bomb
TANYA
O Saints, can romance bloom forever? ..Or Fated to wilt like cut roses? ..O Saints, find me a suitor so clever .So Our Love will bloom forever!
ANNA
Remember? Sometimes we don’t get in bed in time — to celebrate — to come — together —“to dine to intertwine” — at Chicago’s New Year’s Eve Midnight.
(BEAMING)
So now we can “celebrate” Midnight across global time zones: Denver, Mexico City, San Diego, Maui, Tahiti —
GEORGE
Make it Bora Bora. Tahiti’s infested with tourists.
ANNA
And 7 AM our time, finish at Bora Bora!
ANNA VO(mocking)
You’ll be concocting your trimaran. Will be tap tap tap on your garage door window. Peering in will be a sweet girlish face.
(falsetto)
A pretty face gushing: “Is that a trimaran? I JUST LOVE TRIMARANS!”
GEORGE
Yes! And she’ll help build it. We sail. Sail in moonlight. No starlight. Dark, but so calm ..the stars will reflect off the mirror water. Galaxies of stars. Sail among cosmos of stars. Above. Below. Through Surrounding Stars.
ANNA
And you’ll make love on the deck.
GEORGE
Yes! Breeze sleeps. Boat stops. And we drop clothes, drop to deck. And our love energy creates waves of passion, waves of love, waves rippling through out the starry universe!
Image of bobbing trimaran’s waves transmitting out reflected starlit water
GEORGE VO
AND WE’LL BE ONE WITH THE COSMOS.
GEORGE
AND COSMOS WILL BE ONE WITH US. AN’ WE’LL BE ONE WITH EACH OTHER
GEORGE
We are neither young nor old –
TANYA
We neither young nor old –
GEORGE
And with magic of love and laughter
TANYA
With magic of love an’ laughter
GEORGE
We will fight the dark and cold
TANYA
We fight dark an’ cold
GEORGE
And with magic of love and laughter
TANYA
With magic of love and laughter
GEORGE
We will tap into Cosmic Honey Flow
TANYA
We tap into …Cosmic Honey.. Flow —
GEORGE
And air will be golden and our lives will sweetly flow!
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10. How Do You Leave Us With A Profound Ending?
A. Express the Profound Truth:
Romance requires first desire for it and then compromise to form partnership of Go-Giving
. B. The Change:
At Tanya’s urging George shaped up. And Tanya transformed from Czarina vamp to caring playful partner
B. Payoffs:
George and Tanya finally meet “ face to pretty face” and agree to further explore being life long romantic lovers
C. Surprising:
Just when it looks like they will part as George goes off to fly kite, Tanya realizes George does have PhD in Romance and runs after him
. E. Parting Image/Line:
TATIANNA embraces and passionately kisses GEORGE. Fervidly they embraces and kiss.
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Edward Brown height of emotion
I learned I needto learn more andtake more energy sups Actually below shows some real dramatic improvements for me over original language
Second, assignment I need to graph the transitions of phrases. See real power ful tool. It’s 3:41 AM but I finished. Learned must not get hanged up on perfection. Just do it.
Make
a list of the 5 most emotional moments in your screenplay.Tanya tells Boris in decades all be in ground but she demands romance of dance
Tatianna, Siberian culture professor and ballet teacher has been invited to New Years Eve Kremlin ball by billionaire Olegath Boris who was wowed by her class performance in Moscow culture contest.
Tanya great grandfather waltz her with Catherine the Great, so after traveling 4 days by Siberian Transit train, Tanya enters ball room and asks Boris to take time out from billionaire buddy discussions to dance with Tanya. He refuses, refuses even to try.
Upset, Tanya walks away. Boris counters with large necklace of diamonds. Tanya examines it with purse magifing glass and declares it cheap African blood diamonds.
Then Tanya pulls out of her bra two absoulesly sparkling diamond earring. They were formed by meteorite, Siberan fire, and she cuts some of earth formed illegal African blood diamonds.
And again walks away. Searching her bra, Tanya realizes has lost her in town cousin’s apartment key. Siberian vamp is alone in Moscow with no shelter or funds.
So when Boris offers a huge diamond engagement ring, time to get real.
BORIS
This is symbol of us getting “incorporated” You accept?
TANYA looks at BORIS and intent CROWD. Shrugs.
BORIS
Think of your son. His opportunities.
TANYA
Boris, dear, I can’t accept your generous contract offer. We’re not a good match. Obviously, you’re excellent in business.
TANYA fingers the huge engagement stone.
Like as weighing it, Tanya holds Boris’s offered large diamond engagement ring.
TANYA
Wow, this diamond is huge. Even heavy.
BORIS
Ring can be sized for your finger.
Tanya again fingers diamond engagement ring frowning
BORIS
Think of your son’s future.
Smiling Tanya hands back the ring. Crowd shocked. Tanya frowns, then smiles before boldly declaring with hand on hip.
TANYA
It’s very valuable earth stone.
But I’m not economic ciper
an before earth claims my bones
I feel NO chance for romance
With a NO knell proposal, Sir,
And NO humor trying to dance
So, I return offered present —
As Tatiana is not an ornament
Second example: This is a romcom and the prospective male partner George also is ready for new life with a new woman. Scene is at George’s workshop.
GEORGE keeps working. Car honks again. George hits garage door opener.
A snow covered Mercedes drives in through white out blizzard. ANNA, attractive older woman with graded pearl necklace and pushup bra separating her sable coat, glides out of her car. Garage door closes
George is building his 19 year project trimaran. New Year new resolution. Anna cleans up George with wash cloth from purse plastic bag. And lingers on George’s expanding “Grego” with promise after Grosse pointe Cognic party going to bed making love every time zone ending planet’s last New Year Eve, Bora Bora.
As Anna helps George put in his tuxedo studs, she mocks George’s building the trimaran and exploring new possibilities.
Converstion build up
ANNA (mocking)
Open hearts? “New Year. New possibilities”. ..I can see it now.
Image of pretty fem face peering in garage window
ANNA VO(mocking)
You’ll be concocting your trimaran. Will be tap tap tap on your garage door window. Peering in will be a sweet girlish face.
(falsetto)
A pretty face gushing: “Is that a trimaran? I JUST LOVE TRIMARANS!”
GEORGE
Yes! And she’ll help build it. We sail. Sail in moonlight. No starlight. Dark, but so calm ..the stars will reflect off the mirror water. Galaxies of stars. Sail among cosmos of stars. Above. Below. Through Surrounding Stars.
ANNA
And you’ll make love on the deck
GEORGE
Yes! Breeze sleeps. Boat stops. And we drop clothes, drop to deck. And our love energy creates waves of passion, waves of love, waves rippling through out the starry universe!
Image of bobbing trimaran’s waves transmitting out reflected starlit water
GEORGE
AND WE’LL BE ONE WITH THE COSMOS.
GEORGE
AND COSMOS WILL BE ONE WITH US. AN’ WE’LL BE ONE WITH EACH OTHER
ANNA
And you’ll access other dimensions. Ha! BUT NOT — GREGO’S BORA BORA!
ANNA kisses GEORGE on his hands.
ANNA
No lip kisses. For person you kiss New Year’s Eve will effect your life for the new year.
Tearfully, ANNA takes door control. DOOR opens. ANNA drops control in obscuring clutter. Mercedes drives out.
Standing in his underpants and tuxedo shirt and cowl tuxedo, GEORGE TEARFULLY WATCHES SNOW BLOW IN. Watches snow pile up for a Long Time before searching for garage door control in clutter
Here is new quote:
GEORGE
Damn!
We —
Cuddled in box seats
Anna in red dress
At 1812 overture treat
Later cuddled in satin sheets
Damn!
No Cosmos One “Grand Slam”—
If your dreams don’t meet.
Damn! Damn! Damn!
Third scene set up
George and Tanya finally meet face to pretty face in Red Square after Lake Huron Mackinaw sailboat race.
Tanya vamps George speechless. He recovers. Starts playing with his dragon kite. Tanya tells him he’s unacceptable childish and old. Go fly kite.
TANYA
Mr. Drake, you enough vodka. Pay waitress. GO FLY KITE. GO FLY KITE.
GEORGE pays smiling waitress, bows, and testing breeze, GEORGE launches dragon designed kite.
TANYA
Well, no secret morning test. Is he: a merry bird? Or grumpy bear?
BUXOM WAITRESS
Or? Or morning lusty — man?
Kite is soaring above Kremlin. GEORGE waves and growing merry crowd of kids, parents and curious gather. George shows two pretty women how attach paper to string so it glides up to kite.
TANYA
Well, he’s Old! Smells! Fat! Old!
BUXOM WAITRESS
Well, those hotties don’t mind.
TANYA
He’s a bed sampler!
BUXOM WAITRESS
Professor. You fail his secret test!
TANYA frowns, studies GEORGE. Bites lip. Runs toward GEORGE.
George explains that enduring attractiveness is not molecular arrangement but playfulness. He points to two birds playing tag when it is not reproductive season.
He starts to run around with arms out yelling like a bird, “aaakk aaakkkk”
Finally Tanya joins in playing like a bird. Then playmates resume to negotiate.
Encouraged, TANYA does trickier swoops. GEORGE can’t follow. Falls down. Tries again. Falls again. TANYA helps him up. Together they retire to WAITRESS’s table. TANYA raises hand.
TANYA (ordering)
Champagne pozhaluysta — now!
Beaming CUPID WAITRESS hurries to serve.
GEORGE
That was fun! Fun! Together!
Champagne is bubbling in glasses. And bubbling.
TANYA
Must finish negotiations. Do we explore be — US?
GEORGE wedges cork back in bottle.
GEORGE (proposing toast)
NO CZARINA. NO BOSS. PARTNERS.
TANYA (toasting)
PARTNERS! DA!
Glasses click. Smiles turn to calculation.
TANYA (proposing toast)
You shower. Smell sweet. Lose weight.
Glasses click. And GEORGE uncorks bottle to refill glasses.
GEORGE
Partner, we’re so different. But maybe your strengths fill my weakness, My strengths fill your weakness. Da?
GEORGE takes her hands and interlocks her fingers with his fingers. TANYA nods agreement. And radiates.
TANYA (proposing toast)
To, my favorite word –SINERGIYA! SYNERGY!
Glasses click and smiling hearts click. GEORGE refills.
GEORGE (proposing toast)
To, Exploring Ob Sea Novosibrisk –US!
Glasses click, WAITRESS claps, TANYA kisses GEORGE’s hand. COUPLE stands, hugs, kisses. WAITRESS claps. Then TANYA pours last champagne for final toast
Here is the new dialog:
George out of turn makes toast
GEORGE
We are neither young nor old
But bold!
And with magic
Of love and laughter
We’ll fight the dark an’ cold.
An’ with magic
Of love and laughter
We’ll tap into the Cosmic Honey Flow
An’ the air will become magical gold
An’ our lives will sweetly go!
Tanya who stated before holding hands in public was vulgar, passionately kisses George
Waitress quickly grabs their champagne glasses so all hands free to embrace.
Scene George and Tanya scype neoiated new years eve to seal deal to meet Red Square “face to pretty” face for more romance negotiations.
Challenge here is must kiss on phone at planet’s last NYE, Bora Bora, if they are to meet.
Can they seal with kiss meeting Bora Bora’s NYE dead line. Midnight
Playing electronically cupid are Russian Orthodox saints, George Sophia and Nickolas, with God and Spirit actively helping
Basically Divine interveners are playing rock and roll to get old rocker and dither George to kiss the phone Bora Bora midnight New years Eve.
SAINTS NOD BIG BEAT RHYTHUM JUMPS! SAINT GEORGE RAPID FIRES SNAR DRUMS
SAINT GEORGE (estatic)
ALL BALLS OUT!
SOPHIA POINTS TO NICHOLAS
SAINT SOPHIA (CHEERING)
BRING IT HOME NICK!
NICHOLAS triple triple times keyboard, hair back, knocking chair over.
Now let’s go one time kISS baby, KISS, KISS baby, YES YOU, LOVE baby, come on baby, LOVE, baby, LOVE Come on over, whole lot-ta LOV-IN’ go-in’ on
GOD
Georgie be good! Kiss the damn phone.
TANYA (commanding interruiption)
GEORGIE DARLING, KISS DAMN PHONE IN YOUR HAND. SO WE SHARE BORA BORA NEW YEAR AND LOVIN’ SO GRAND. OR OR STAY HOME!
GEORGE nods, knocks Champagne over AND and drops phone in clutter. More BORA BORA firecrackers. SAINTS audio frantically playing.
GEORGE CAN’T FIND PHONE IN CLUTTER OF MESS AND NOISE.
TANYA
GEORGE! I’M IN WOOD SCRAPS!
GOD
SPIRIT’S EARLY ONE MINUTE UP. Got 14 seconds left real time. SILENCE!
In silence GEORGE hears TOLYA on TANYA’S phone in clutter.
TANYA’S PHONE TOLYA SPEAKING
Yt dolzhen byl vybrat’ Boris
TANYA’S PHONE TANYA SPEAKING
Nyet Boris! Da Khotet’ GEORGE!
GEORGE audio finds phone. HURRIEDLY Grabs Phone.Laptops in both Novosibrisk and Detroit now on BORA BORA LIVE INTERNET count down to New Year
LAPTOP AUDIO AND SCREEN
SIX 6 CINO 5
GEORGE (YELLING)
OB SEA!
TANYA (yelling)
DA! NOVOSIBRISK!
LAPTOP AUDIO AND SCREEN
TRIOS 3 – DEUX 2
BOTH TANYA AND GEORGE KISS PHONES!
LAPTOP AUDIO AND SCREEN
BONNE ANNEEUN! Fire works explosions. Cheering. Fire crackers. Sky lit up palm trees and lagoon mountain. BONNE ANNÉEUN! BONNE ANNÉEUN!
Major lightning and thunder in Novosibrisk Detroit.
BOTH TANYA AND GEORGE STILL KISSING PHONES! And don’t notice SPIRIT has hacked internet laptop again.
SPIRIT HACKED LAPTOP
And now our regular programming:
SAINTS JAMMIN’. GOD and SPIRIT privately confer.
SPIRIT (nodding toward kissers)
Should I jigger A odds for romance?
GOD
Jigger. Like always they got free will to blow it.
SPIRIT looks at GOD. GOD give thumbs up.
BIG DRUM on its own BOOMS BOOMS. GOD and SPIRIT circle dance.
SAINT NICKOLAS (YELLS)
MUSIC: WHOLE LOT OF LOVIN” GOIN’ ON!
GEORGE pulling away from phone to inhale, notices on his cell phone screen: TANYA’s red lipstick kiss.
Tanya pulling away notices her lipstick on phone
Visually Dissolve only to RED LIPSTICK KISS.
new dialog
GEORGE OVER VOICE
New Year! New woman! New Life? This is scary! We might Marry!
TANYA VOICE OVER
New Year! New Man! New New Life? This is scary! We might marry!
Audibly dissolve to
ALL SAINTS SINGING VO
WHOLE LOT-TA OF LOV-IN’ Go-IN’ ON!
ALL SAINTS SINGING
YEH. WHOLE LOT-TA OF LOV-IN’ Go-IN’ ON!WHOLE LOT OF LOVIN GOIN OONNNNNNNNNNN!
SCENE: July Mackinaw island race over with over 1000 joyfuls celebrating, free beer, infested with attractive bosomy women who like to follow the yacht sailors.
Now that Tanya has George losing weight and grooming better and who is tactician on winning trimaran, ladies are friendly. Word spreads how his bold strategy won the race.
Tanya calls to confirm George is coming to meet in Moscow or not. Skype phone tells Siberian Tanya that life is good in Michigan.
George says he has business concerns. Has to hang up now to go on stage with crew and skipper to get first place flag.
Tanya frets.
Award given to Molly 78 year old skipper whose girlfriend to owner.
Owner and Molly get flag and cheers. And Molly collapse. Heart attack. Graps mike for final words:
Molly
Don’t fret. I knew my heart bad.
Happy I raced. Die with no regrets.
Happy to race with my love. Vive de Joie.
Molly twists in pain.
Molly
George be a bold fool. Go. Don’t
Later regret …
Go!
By now sailors/doctors on stage. Feel her throat.
Flag draped over her. Other blue flags cover Molly
George skypes Tanya.
George
Ten Days. Red Square. Wear straw hat.
Red scraf. Must be table by refreshments.
Tanya
Da.
Novosibirk /Siberia big Catherdral
Trying to find Tanya a mate, her case worker Saints call in Jesus, Jesus calls in SPIRIT, fumbloxed they all call in God.
God takes evolutionary position that Tanya should be allowed to goof up per natural selection. Further more sex should have keep family together. That’s how Sapiens beat cousin Monkeys.
Saints counter:
GOD
So generations after generations, Mom and Dad bonded in sexual climaxes to raise kids longer. Longer childhood evolved into adults with smarter brain cortexes.
Image: monkeys climb trees versus humans morphing from cave animal clothing to medieval gear on horse to space suits in space ship.
SPIRT
Result: Monkeys haven’t evolved far.. But you, cousins, have rovers on Mars.
GOD shares dark loaf, Sophia nods and points.
Wall Images: many rotating sexual partners
SAINT SOPHIA
Hey, news flash, fossils show Sapiens beat monkeys eons ago But there’s trouble in paradise, blessed climaxes are with someone else’s exes
Saints nod
Wall Image: male gazing at computer of porn
SAINT SOPHIA
Perhaps worse calamity is escape from reality. You may groan, but over half internet is porn
Image: Male engrossed in video game ignoring attractive female cupping her bare breasts
SAINT GEORGE
And even virtual sex is goin’ lame as more guys play video games with no interest to jiggle female breasts
Image: realistic naked voluptuous female doll that smiles
SAINT NICHOLAS
Worse, I kid you not, there’s hot debate: can you marry your sex doll bot!
GOD
Okay crew, lets define the problem. Often Dads out door before Babes out of mom.
(beat)
Worse,40 per cent of your marriages bomb
Saint nod agreement
GOD
One neat solution: is dads delete.
Saints throw bread at God. Spirit flashes.
Image: Ma Pa ducks and ducklings
JESUS YELLING
Two by two on Arc!
GOD AS FEMALE FACE
Instead of penises rank, scientific sperm banks.
SAINT GEORGE bangs his sword repeatedly and points to video image on Church wall: despondent short boy being denied to practice as taller boys shoot baskets. Outside, Short boy is welcomed by flashy dressed drug dealer.
SAINT GEORGE
With no fathers, poor boys often look to male sports coaches.
SAINT NICHOLAS
Yeah, sports glamorized on TV.
SAINT GEORGE
But many boys, like too short Vincent, can’t play round ball. So they’re easily recruited to sell drugs.
(beat)
Then to pay for drugs, their drug customers mug ‘n’ rob!
(beat)
And when the New Drug Sellers get busted, these New felons can’t get legitimate jobs.
(beat)
At least, Good Jobs. For while in school, they didn’t think they needed Good Education to go far, ’cause they were goin’ be drug dealers or sports stars.
SAINT NICKOLAS
It’s worse.
Wall image of rich and poor dressed kids zoned on weed
SAINT NICKOLAS
Rich kids, poor kids ..well, when male authority feeble aimlessly get into drugs. Zoned out. Especially now that’s Cannabis legal.
New dialog:
Saint Sophia
We call you “FATHER” because
Fathers are strong protective and
Care. And problem solvers.
(beat)
You came in here a green tiger, then female
Morphed in tradional Father face.
(beat)
Well if you won’t help, don’t care, we should
Not call you FATHER anymore but pussy cat that plays with us.
SAINT GEORGe
Or fraud!
Assignment 2
I-m tired. But idea has merit. Can start with being bold, starting new when Tanya decides to go to Moscow for Boris
When both George and Tanya decide to be bold to meet, to go jointy Siberia,
The other theme is Go Giving care for other could start when Jesus proclaims it key, then Jesus evaluating as George and Tanya progressively compromise to bigger things as considering the other.
Big battle her is Tanya is self centered and George is too pleasing against his best interests. So both must modify.
Can have jesus evaluating love neighbor as love self as George personally takes better care of himself, and Tanya progressively does more for George vs being constant taker.
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insight thru irony
Edward
Brown insight thru ironyI
learn have been doing this naturally BUT could make narrative zinger if really
used moreStep
one: what new way/insight you want to deliver?VD
test = physical = brush teeth + walk + eat smartAnna
comes to apologize for taking George forgranted = George must more assertive
for self not total giving or taken as weaklingTanya
says she’s world class woman, George says half world full of nipples, but
George shapes up and is swarmed at Mac finish by serious women, then Molloy
dies and whispers joy of Life is being bold and not regretting later adventures
not takenTanya
tells George off as plays with Kite only to see serious women playing with himGod
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Profound Day 13 insights thru conflict
Edward Brown I learned I had built in these but by focusing on them, making them more dramatic makes it more convincingly profound
Needs more work, but here are some
Insights
1. George whacks Tanya about not honoring male purgatives, so Tanya helps polite fiction men lead
2. Tanya whacks George about females being kept out of power so George understands females may be better at collaborate leadship
3. Saints whack God sex is no longer bonding couples to raise kids so God open to explore romantic bonding/go giving/joint missions
4. Saint whack God that BOOK Jesus parables are for old dying population so God decides to make TV Go Giving parable binge series.
5. Tanya whacks George about his every day grooming and dress so George realize his public projections gets more sales, more kisses, more self happy image
6. Tanya refuses Billionaire marriage proposal and realizes she wants a romantic partnerd
7. George refuses Anna’s all night sex realizing wants life partner not party girl
8. Anna realized she took George forgranted and begins sailing lessons
9. George in Court loses default judgment so realizes needs files and calendar
10. As world gets Satan hypersonic missiles that can begin destruction of planet’s protective ionosphere, God realizes why evolution give free will choices, God needs to warn blue planet bipeds — so plants Mar’s last recordings
11. Tanya has lovers but realize they aren’t dad prospects when she’s pregnant so accepts George as a proven dad
12. When WSU president rants he wants to fire Tanya as professor because she had sex on campus which was secretly televised, George begins podcasts defending “family values” and realizes to build bigger base he adds other unique political positions that gain support, so he realizes after Governor nixes deal having Tanya internet learning czar, that he enjoys politics and runs for governor as an independent
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Edward Brown action speaks
what I learned is use chart of old vs new and make it action
Also, going thru script I spotted opportunities
So both strategies are fruitful
Here are some notes, more are on my script handwritten
George
Old way no daily grooming vs Grooming per Tanya inspection
Old way no pick up when drop. Leave me vs Tanya inspection
Old way: often do what woman wants vs assert male leads, male orders food
Old way: would have gone to Siberia vs assert Detroit settles for Moscow
Old way: would comply for sex vs other values more than sex
Old way would take time and dating to qualify woman vs playful bird test
Tanya
old way orders men vs now negotiates
old way: made man do proposing as woman disposses vs calls George to suggest Moscow
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Edward Brown assigment 1 Sea Biscuit
I learned how action speaks louder than words, that having long goal journey keeps story in focus, sports like Queens Gambit show this, also impressed by gradient of stronger reclaiming of not killing severly injured horse to again winner
Side note: real untold story is book was written by cast off writer who could not fous to write on her own long book narrative. She researched and perservered.
short hand notes:
Adaptive: Spokes to own bike shop
Adaptive Fix steamer and improve > car biz witch is growing bigger than bikes
Vision Big: Buy large farm > bold dreams of possibilities
Reclaim talent overlooked: Warren sees horse mender > hires him gets advice heart counts more
Adaptive and care mate restores :Woman sees broken man charms him into restored life marriage
Recognize spunk: Adaptive Horse and jockey both alike and joined both reclaimed
Adaptive: Secret bell training
Don’t scape out lives: Loses race by nose because can’t see and not fired or scrapped out
Little horse symbol of little guy that beaten folks and audience relates: Big vs little horse vs rich establishment vs little guy
Promote and build fans when things go bad: Open in field and crowds swarm in
When down, don’t give up: Red heals Biscuit and wins from way behind
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Edward Brown living metaphors
I learned that I did this previous lesson as they are most dramatic
However, having skipped previous lessons, I did it now. Have alot of can’t find tools or phone in clutter, have scene wherre George propositions woman in church, she tell him she’s STDed and he should get lab tests of propective initmates, he asks Tanya to get one, she askes him to get a physical, med check up shows he’s in bad shape as has been neglectful in old ways, so he goes on diet and walking maybe weights certaily chair yoga
there are things like this all thru with Tanya rightfully claiming to be a world class woman and George must have new ways
Also, Anna tells George that he must have everyday or planned times to build boat, proof after 20 years still buildidng it.
Spirit brings in Aristole to repeat excellence is not an event but result of diligent habits
so I learned going thru script, many opportunities
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Edward Brown counter examples
I learned to try for dramatic examples of old way neglectful behavior that audience might do that challenges Protagonist George
Short hand examples:
1 lockout of own building by City as mess, needs lawyer with time clean up, lesson keep clean by clean dropped mess NOW and weekly reorganize or on rainy days
1. Goes to church to find local gal alternative to Siberian Tanya. Hot babe warns him she has STDs and he should get medical report before getting intimate
2. Tooth hurts, dentist says needs to brush and wash at least daily to prevent ED, strokes, diabities etc
3. Tanya when asked for STD tests, wants his medical fitness report: Med doc says as getting older, diabities, stokes, so must eat smarter and walk
4. Misses court date because does not keep calendar or filing system, could default on $9K neglected lawsuit
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<div>Edward Brown 12 man chart</div>
I learned actually using chart help nderstand graphically summery of relevant points
I also leaned the chart we were asked to fill in can not be downloaded here
Edward Brown old ways vs challenges
I learned charts help think but can not be down loaded
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Edward Brown great endings
What I learned is going over my story, I found real opportunities to improve. Work notes:
1. Profound Truth:
Romance is team sport for a common or negotiated childhood dream or joint mission
Final Images
Bird dance > champaign toasts and negotiations > negotiated dreams with Go Giving bonuses of Dad’s wind tunnel, maybe book deal on romance history > walking off in attempted waltz steps to Ob Sea
1. Complete transformation of Tanya
Czarina > partner
2. Set ups pay offs
Dance
Sail
Wind tunnel
Publisher
I rule v partner
Dance off
Wants father mate > finds one
Want to vamp G to come G insists Siberia
Need earlier kite and flying have kite in workshop
Need earlier need stress sail power vs Dad wind tunnel
Earlier stress dragons dragon kite
Must develop have approx. joint dreams/make history> solve human problems. Czarina/ fear of China/ Mongals/ war schrmiages
Fight fair vs rule or pout
Vulger hold hands vs leave holding hands
How
are you designing it to have us see an inevitable ending and then making
it surprising when it happens?3. Talk of G’s secret weapon
Have fly kite
Need to earlier have kite flying set up
Need
Dancing/
4. What is the Parting Image/Line that leaves us with the Profound Truth in our minds
Previously in set up Tanya breaks up with suitor who wants to hold hands “as is vulgar. “
But after action negotiations in Red Square, Czarina Tanya and George agree to be romantic partners and to travel to Siberia to further explore relationship. So on leaving Red Square, George wants to hold Tanya’s hand, she refuses. George up set. Then Tanya kisses George’s hand and locks her arm with George’s and whispers, “Partner.”
Leave and they leave Red Square as couple locked arms and smiling.
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Edward Brown connect to audience
What I learned is need to explore the 4 grids. And dramtize them. what follows is not narraive but my work notes
transformable and mutual change agent are the two prospective lovers
Tanya
Likeable
Spunky
Cares about son
Values romance over money
DOUBTS BUT ACTS
Empathy
Break off violently with suitor who not good dad, boring,
Decides to Moscow
Left on floor scorned
Stood up to billionaire
SON CRITICIZES
Dad does not believe
Tough train ride
Identify
COMPLUTOR MATCH FAILS
Has Tanya 2 help
Just match no fire
Intrique
How George get phone number
Need her to emote more, be more dramatic
Gets dossier on George, tricks questions
Has report system/IVAN/charmed agent
Plot to get huband of influence/plot get promoted
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Edward Brown profound structure
I learned intuitively or remembering MM I fairly followed format. However, adding profound before and after progression added a lot
What follows is for my own thinking, thus, short thought notes. Not meant for other, but me on concise pages.
To discover secret alchemy romance’s giving and sharing, God introduces two uber romantics with opposite personalities, Tanya structured Siberian professor and George chaotic Detroit roofer. Hope is lessons learned can be parable binge series so romance will keep parents together and nuclear nations don’t create another extinct Mars.
Ordinary world:
After rich or career enhancement prospects
Siberia culture residence mined out
Call to adventure for NYE Kiss
Go to Kremlin
George talk
Resists but locked in
Retalk
Train
Appeals to outside help
Prayer/ on own
Bigger plan but fails due to lack of info
Boris rejects
George breaks off
Licks wounds, reflects
Putin
Wind tunnel
Ready to change,new plan, fails
Must test live with Prospect
George still rejects
Apparent victory
Ob Sea, tunnel
George happy
Siberia too far
Victory Agreement sealed with NYE Kiss
Moscow
Ob Sea maybe
Call to Adventure
Ordinary world
Send Valentine?
Resists but locked in
Exchange valentines
Appeals to outside help
Research
Anna
Byran
Veronica
Bigger Plan, fails
Vamp George Red Square
Reflects
George tested me
Runs after george
Apparent Victory
States reflective
Laughs at Bird dance
Bird Dance together
Agree synergy partners
Not Czaria, subject
Agree to fly to Siberia
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Edward Brown three gradients
I learned I intutitively did this already, but got some focus improvements
my work sheet is three column graphic for my best mapping out flow
this download will not reflect that well, I it helps me organize my thoughts. besides I am goinjg to do stacking interlocking action and this is must for me
SWU day 5 profound 3 gradients assignment
will Tanya vamp Boris for new life posibilities
Excitement going by train to Moscow challenge/ vamping Boris
Anticipation of Catherine’s Palace NYE Ball weakness/ not know each other/never dated
Anticipation of exciting life was billionaire wife
Anticipation of father’s funding, son’s paved future
Anticipation of being head of culture U department
Enters Palace Ball Room dressed to vamp
Doubt Boris huddled with male fellow billionaires challenge/ break in to male circle
Warned not to intervene weakness/ women not proactive, but responders
Man proposes, woman disposes
No experience interloping/ sought after vamp
Discouragement Boris refuses to try waltzing Challenge/ get Boris comply
Weakness/ how respond to refusal/so walks
Can’t negotiate
Courage refuses DIMOND necklace/ring challenge/ romance is prime value/ live life on
REFUSES MARRIAGE Own terms
Weakness/ stuck alone on floor/no way home
No plan B
TRIUMPH Vamps Putin for flight home challenge/vamp and convince Putin
Sets up funding for Father weakness/no lover/ now midnight kiss
Will Tanya be open to new unconventional romantic possibilites
DENIAL flight home challenge/can’t believe Boris won’t try waltzing
Would propose without kneeling
ANGER flight home should have know better about rich/powerful men
Weakness/ outward promotion/pwer/resources
BARGARING maybe I could have trained/killed him challenge/males rule
Catherine had Czar husband killed
Weakness/prenups/no guarentes/ loveless mate
DEPRESSION never going to find romantic mate challenge/few desirable prospects
Weakness/ don’t know what to do
ACCEPTANCE pray challenge/beyond my capabilities
Weakness/Czarina mind set not open
Better have PhD Romance
Will Tanya and George connect enough to agree to meet face to “pretty face”
EXCITEMENT George calls challenge/believing prospect
DOUBTS skype: slop, Detroit, roofer challenge/qualifying prospect
Weakness/know nothing about George
Except wearing a tux, messy, not one to promote her
Career, social standing, if so, would he come Siberia
HOPE George is rosy romantic, seeks ny eave kiss CHALLENGE/ kiss by global midnight
WEAKNESS/ only skype meeting
DISCOURAGMENT Detroit vs Siberia Challenge/George won’t Siberia
Weakness/missed time zone kiss agreements
Real romantic signs off
“ Mexico didn’t work out
Siberia ice or sailing season”
COURAGE propose meet Moscow/then maybe Siberia challenge/negotiate to win George
Weakness/inflexible timing
TRIUMPH agree after Mackinaw Race, Moscow
Tickets, Cash advance, Ob Sea CHALLENGE: GETTING GEORGE TO KISS
BEFORE LAST GLOBAL NYE BORA BORA
WEAKNESS/ Da or Nyet
THEY KISS AT BORA BORA NYE MIDNIGHT!
Will George and Tanya after second thoughts meet in Moscow?
EXCITEMENT George excited, tells son, Vincent CHALLENGE: have I been vamped?
WEAKNESS: vampable “PUSSY WHIPPED”
Tanya excited, ballet girls excited CHALLENGE: is George a Player?
Tolya alarmed, Victor suspicious Weakness: how evaluate Detroit prospect? DOUBT Tanya decides on only respond emails
George decides on only respond emails CHALLENGE: is other hot for me?
Valentine Day Tanya challenge panties weakness: 11 time zones
George emails building valentine
HOPE George studies academic town CHALLENGE: if Siberia, use wind tunnel?
Internet says rental wind tunnel weakness: make arrangement
Tanya researches Anna CHALLENGE get honest assessment
Weakness: ANNA relates slob, disorganized etc
TANYA sees spinnaker on flag pole
DISCOURAGMENT George helps win Mac, never leave Challenge: mac party infested with
Jobs, business, life style, other sailor women at mac party attractive sailing women
Tanya meets with publisher, ex threatens not to pay Weaknness: seeking sail mate
Get PhD if published, then dean of Culture school Challenge: Tanya delimina Moscow or defer PhD rewards
COURAGE heart attack kills Meggie receiving FLAG
Her choice race and risk attack vivre de vie George Challenge: confirm Moscow
Or be with her man live life fullest weakness: fear being vamped diverted
Funeral statement Tanya challenge: steady comfort or
Adventure
Weakness: wants adventure
Both heros: ventures
TRIUMPH BOTH GET ON PLANES FOR MOSCOW G’s Challenge: no vamped, know Tanya
Weakness: vampable, Ob Sea, T playful ?
T’s Challenge: can rule George
Weakness: not good at compromise
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SWU day 4 A change agents and transformed
Edward Brown: I’m going to use Billy W’s dramatic contrast strategy as in “Taming of the Shrew” where: had stand firm husband BUT BIG was compare the featured couple vs old way couples.
So God is the instatigator by putting total opposites George and Tanya to discover secret of what takes to create romance forever.
Incidentally, I had Tanya’s ex husband with new Irina with both plotting against Tanya’s father plus Geoge and Tanya.
However, I could use their dynamics not being Go Giving but selfish and having them turn on each other.
Got to ponder this.
Oppression besides selfishness, boredom, and plotting extinction weapons. FSB and silviki security folks.
Need to ponder this more.
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Edward Brown transition, I learned before/after important but need more ways for audience identify with characters and less preaching
Tanya old Ways : George old ways: Creator old ways:
Wants waltze wants sailor mate natural selection
At big ball win Mackinaw evolution
Self centered neglects self prophets
Vamp vampable Jesus
Czarina not assertive church/mosque/temp
Stay in Siberra Michigan sex for bonding
Don’t go Detroit no go to Siberia sapiens now smart
Lover/husband: wants total synergy partner know better
Infulencial George New ways less intervention
Help her career while still Go giver “in book”
Establish in society resist being vamped be Go Givers
Not a business owner like George resist being father suckered new Ways
Not slob like George will clean up/org parableTV Series
Not live in warehouse like George maybe an apartment/or opposites:
Not use hands for living like George live on boat G + T
Not associated with other races like George assert male prerogatives romance
not in command or assertive demand synergy Mars:
But because George: new way
Romantic Sapiens make peace or extinct
GOOD FATHER
Coachable
Makes women happy
Believes in dragons like her father
Tanya agrees or promotes meeting face to her pretty face hoping to vamp George into being a compliant Lover
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Edward Brown’s first three decisions
1. profound truth: Go Giving generally is successful for lovers, everyday folks, and nations because it is designed into creation and has been discovered by phophets
2. change for audeince to be more Go Giving to each other everyday, coulples more proactive, and citizens of world demand rulers don’t extinct planet’s life
Vechical: Creator creating parable movies starring totally opposite lovers to illustate Go Giving
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another insight: I attended seminar on comedy. Basic take away, have ordinary protanonist who keeps trying and failing and finally makes it
Now with Ground Hog, this fits pattern. the presenter used this as example.
Here is what was new insight, he said the producer/writer redid original script to have gradiant of change be some M gee I can’t spell it maybe maslow stages of grief where griefer goes from delinal to (yes I cant spell) to acceptence.
So Phil starts denying what happened to finally accepting it and learning piano and being Go Giving good guy
great gradiant of change
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Edward Brown’s analyses of Ground Hog Day
1. Change is about going from self centeredness to caring about others as shown by weatherman
2. Change agent is producer. She is romantic reward who demands not superficial but internal transformation.
3. We are lured into journey by opening that right away dramatizes Weatherman is jerk. Friendly fun Ground Hog Event is inviting setting/event. Also, we see ourselves somewhat thru weatherman. Plus, it’s obvious attractive male and female as hostile should be romantic partners
4. Weatherman changed the most. However, producer changed to being open and appreciative of is new personality. The camera man is dramatic contrast by always being critical.
Old way was resenting/cynical of Ground Hog event and towns people. New way was accepting situation and going from self centerness to being a Go-Giver.
5. Weatherman went from protesting cynic to stages of grief to acceptance to buy in caring guy and learning piano. Piano progress was great way to show gradient of change..
6. Old way was challenged because it did not work. Weatherman’s old beliefs of he was just doing time in this job site to being scoffed at, to being spurned by “romantic interest” producer, and just being unhappy enough to commit suicide.
Also, the growing acceptance of producer to weatherman rewarding him with gradient of improvement.
So, seeing old homeless man in decline, who was not same everyday, but everyday being worse, had to be variable showing life was terminal so best enjoy it.
Aristotle said happiness is ultimate goal. As Phil changed, he got happier per producer and community feed back.
7. Profound moments: suicide attempts, trying to save old man, making snowman, saving old ladies, kid, choker, and big party scenes and producer’s acceptance per bid $388.25. and waking up next day and walking out in empty street.
Also, how attempts to be slick superficial cons being rejected. Rejection = old ways not working.
8. Profound lines start with every morning DJ’s line and then finally at last different.
Telling kid be more appreciative or won’t catch him next time. All the great lines at party.
Camera man’s cynic lines. Phil’s bed lines next day. Guys saying everyday was same showing for “Normal” people there is no gradient.
9. Phil’s cynical attitude toward town’s people and scheming to seduce Producer are trans formed with at party town people thanking Phil, Phil being great piano player, and formally spurning Producer bidding $388.25, probably all her ready cash = her appreciation of new Phil and “staying.”
10. Profound message is don’t get trapped in self centered cynical everyday boredom with alcohol type escape but progressively enjoy term limited life more by being Go Giver caring buoyant person.
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Hi I’m Edward Brown. I’ve written 5 scripts. Hope to make my script profound enough to introduce concept Go Giving is key to individual, social well being plus planetary survival
I enjoy day dreaming, sailing, dancing and making women smile
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Edward Brown story conventions
I learned romance go or break up is not enough high stakes
Life and death
Problem is who can be the killers? UFOs, FSB, IVAN
1. What are the conventions of your story?
Unwitting but Resourceful Hero:
GEORGE being vamped to go to Siberia
GOD being cajoled to do experiment
Dangerous
Villain:Tanya the Vamp
World without romance and fatherhood
World without caring
Ivan the FSB killer
Controlers Putin and Xi
High stakes:
GEORGE/TANYA future happiness
TOLYA given love and male guidance to become man
CONTROLERS taking away freedoms
UFO aliens plotting to control the controlers
IVAN as threat to kill and destroy VICTOR, GEORGE, TANYA, ALEXI
World devolving into not caring indivisually, becoming mechanical, not personal, no family, so state, numeracies, and controllers make ineffective society that can be expoytived by UFO aliens
Life and death situations:
VICTOR vs keep secrets
IVAN killing moonshiner FSB chief, threat to George and Tanya. IVAN
Can nuke themselves into dust
Not ready for or united for future attacks of disease, astroids, sunburst
· This story is thrilling because? ,
A lot going on
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Ed Brown Sum of all fears Thriller conventions
1. matches our model, more suspense, but mystery of connections
2. unwilling Jack Ryan goes to Moscow, goes to Ukraine, goes into danger, resourceful in finding the how the who the why
· dangerous villain, buys bomb, hires techies kills techs, delivers bomb,
· life and death: of Baltimore, POTUS, Cabot, Ukraine, USA, Russia
· thrilling because things can consecutively go wrong
3. Big Mystery who is inside back channel
Big Intrigue is villains’ plot unwinding
BIG Suspense is can war be stopped?
4. thriller because reality based of fears and could happen, not fantasy
5. multiple players interwoven with increasing danger AND urgent URGENT NEEDED SOLUTION!
Set ups made for payoffs and created more credible actions outcomes
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Ed Brown Sum of all fears Thriller conventions
1. matches our model, more suspense, but mystery of connections
2. unwilling Jack Ryan goes to Moscow, goes to Ukraine, goes into danger, resourceful in finding the how the who the why
· dangerous villain, buys bomb, hires techies kills techs, delivers bomb,
· life and death: of Baltimore, POTUS, Cabot, Ukraine, USA, Russia, girl friend, coworkers
· thrilling because things consecutively go wrong getting worse worse then better but will it work?
3. Big Mystery who is inside back channel
Big Intrigue is villains’ plot unwinding
BIG Suspense is can war be stopped?
4. thriller because reality based of fears and could happen, not fantasy
5. multiple players interwoven with increasing danger AND urgent URGENT NEEDED SOLUTION!
Set ups made for payoffs and created more credible actions outcomes
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Edward Brown character tracks
write, sell, rejoice
I learned need more action and after listening to pilot class series of reveals
Need to make Tanya more determined, and tough
like her let suitor stand on tracks, kill thief and dump offf train, scream “stroke” and get onductor open door by vamping
need to have George and Tanya move sword tworl and ballet poses etc when thinking or upset
maybe have George eat and later sword twirl and beat drum so tranformation
have Tanya use posion stroke “gun” her ex husband used
have Putin see kite from Kremlin window and approach Tanya and then order survalance on George
have Ivan practic sword fighting
Have victor decorate lab
have Tolya do happy dance
have Tanya insist Tolya learn cooking, cleaning, making beds so be good wife as men slugs and she wants great grand children
have Tanya teach or try to teach Tolay and George formal dancing
Have Tanya have research check list on George as prosepect
and sip wine or do ballet leap when passes
Have George clean up cut hole in roof calendar schedule, groom, spoken blazer
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edward brown beat sheet 1
I am getting it
learned need board with different color tabs for differenct characters. gave me insights and suggestions I would have missed if wrote out beats
so I did it by acts with differenct characters intgeracting and then plotted in subtext hidden
Need to do more but easy this way
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