[Eugene Mandelcorn]

Hi Pamela,

Actually, the course said 16 Lessons, but when you take the course, only 10 Lessons are listed (unless you count the videos as separate lessons) but they are numbered to correspond with the written lessons they refer to. We never actually get to a finalized 4 Act Outline, or a first draft of a script. It ends with a good concept of what goes into the structure of a Romantic Comedy but doesn't really walk you through a well-constructed script. This is my analysis. I am sure Hal, and his staff, will have a better answer.

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EUGENE’S BANTER/FLIRTING/EXPRESSIONS OF LOVE

What I learned doing this assignment is that the more Banter, Flirting and Expressions of Love in the script, the more that an audience will feel their love and identify with the characters.

BANTER

Joe drives with Beth in the passenger seat and Voice and Karen in the rear. Voice sits behind Beth and Karen is scrunched against the window behind Joe. She holds her nose.

VOICE: (with contempt) So, what’s your name?
KAREN: Karen.
VOICE: Karen, what?
KAREN: I’d rather you didn’t know my last name.
VOICE: That’s fine I’d rather you didn’t know my first. Just try to stay away from me.
KAREN: (holding her nose) That shouldn’t be too hard.

Arriving at the small lot where their tiny houses will be built.

VOICE: I doubt it’s even buildable.
KAREN: What do you know. The Voice actually has a mind.
VOICE: I’ll have you know; I graced the stage on 3 different continents.
KAREN: What did you play, a fool?
VOICE: Only if the part was written by the Bard.

FLIRTING

Joe is trying to convince Beth to work with him on a film project.

BETH: So, I’ve still got your jacket. At least if we meet again, I can give it back to you. If not, I can always mail it.
JOE: I really would love to work together, if we can.
BETH: Do you have a script?
JOE: Not exactly, but I know what problem I want to solve.
BETH: Yeah?
JOE: Homelessness. (beat) You think you could write the script?
BETH: I don’t know. Do you have a story?
JOE: The characters will tell the story.
BETH: This course has put me back a bit. I don’t know if I have the time to write a feature screenplay. I have to work to eat.
JOE: I could pay you.
BETH: You have the money to pay me? How much do you have to make this film?
JOE: Enough. When can you start?
BETH: I need a little more info.
JOE: Can you help me cast it?

EXPRESSION OF LOVE

When the police threaten to remove Voice and Karen from the lot where Joe and Beth plan to build their tiny homes, Voice gets in an argument with the police and when they wrestle him to the ground and handcuff him, Karen pleads for the police to let him go. When he loses consciousness and has to be put into an ambulance, Karen insists on riding with him, holding his hand, on the way to the hospital.

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Eugene’s Romance Emotions Part 2

What I learned doing this assignment is that some of the Emotions from Part 1, overlap and result in the stronger emotions in Part 2.

Betrayal
Joe records a very personal discussion with Beth.

Anger
When Beth finds out that Joe recorded their very personal conversation she is incensed and leaves telling Joe, she no longer can work on the film project together.
Voice and Karen exchange barbs back and forth for scene after scene and situation after situation.
Voice overreacts when the police try to evict them from the small lot across the street from the new home development and has a stroke.

Passion
Joe reveals his passion for Beth, and she puts it on the back burner, informing Joe she is only interested in a positive conclusion to the film project.
Voice and Karen after exhausting every slam of each other realize when Voice has a stroke that they really care about each other.

Obsession
Joe continues to try to win Beth’s affection, despite her determination to keep their relationship merely business.

Love
After the foursome, Joe, Beth, Voice and Karen, is held up together in the unfinished basement of tiny home, to weather the tornado, they express their deep caring and love for each other.

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Eugene’s Romance Emotions Part 1

What I learned doing the assignment is that there are emotions that each character feels that are only hinted at and are not obvious until a situation brings them to light.

Attraction:

When Joe meets Beth in the park, he is definitely attracted to her and fumbles with his lines. She thinks he’s a fool.

When Voice and Karen meet, he is at first attracted to her, but she makes it clear that she is repulsed by him, and he verbally attacks back.

Desire:

When Joe and Beth are assigned to watch a movie together for a film class they are taking, Joe feels like it is a first date and Beth is shocked at his forward actions.

Both Voice and Karen want to have a home but are not sure about living together. They are obviously opposites in many ways.

Yearning

Joe offers to pay Beth to work on his film. She is having financial problems, so she takes him up on his offer. He will at least have her by his side almost every day.

Voice is aware that he wants female companionship and once Karen helps him in areas where he is somewhat backward, such as cleanliness, he develops a yearning for her presence in his life.

Doubt

When Beth discovers that Joe has recorded personal information she confided to him, she feels betrayed and walks out on the production.

When it is decided that the city will allow only one tiny home to be built on the property, it becomes a contest between Voice and Karen for the residence and their differences re-surface.

Jealousy

A relationship has developed between Voice and Karen and Joe is jealous because he wanted a relationship with Beth, but he blew it.

Voice is jealous of Karen’s sophistication. It is one of things that makes it difficult to make a connection with her despite his attraction to her.

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Eugene’s Comedy Situations

What I learned doing this assignment is that I have included many of these situations in my script.

When Joe first meets Beth, he mistakes her for a homeless woman and drops some coins in her coffee cup, which is not empty and spills scalding hot coffee on her. (Embarrassment)

(Joe tries to apologize but says the wrong things and only makes situation worse. He is attracted to Beth but keeps on saying the wrong things. Beth alarm is turned on when he starts making flirting comments. She thinks he may be stalking her.) Misinterpretation

When they are assigned to work on a film project together, and go to a movie together, Joe assumes that it is a date, but to Beth it is only an assignment. (forced union of incompatibles)

(When Beth feels funny about the two of them working together, Joe offers to pay her, and she takes it as an inappropriate gesture, even though she could use the money.) Misinterpretation

When Voice and Karen are chosen to star in the film project Joe and Beth are making, they turn out to dislike each other. (forced union of incompatibles)

(Voice is dirty and smells, while Karen is haughty and immaculate.) opposites

When a tornado hits the set of their film, the four of them, Joe, Beth, Voice and Karen must go into a dark, damp, cramped, underground structure. (Comedic Tragedy)

(They have problems with being so close but soon overcome their differences. They come out of the underground structure more than just friends.) Comedic Surprise

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Eugene’s Double Rom-Com Structure

What I learned doing this assignment was that it is much more difficult than I thought to put together these 3 elements into a meaningful 4 Act Structure.

Act 1:

INITIAL STATE: JOE is a young man who has lost his mother in a tragic accident, has inherited the home, and fears that his father who left the family when he was young, is among the homeless. He aspires to be a successful filmmaker. BETH is estranged from her family, who are financially insecure, and she is struggling to make a living on her own. She also aspires to be a successful filmmaker.

Opening: MEET-CUTE MOMENTS -Joe and Beth meet in a park and then at film screening meet at a film screening.
JOE drops coins in Beth’s Coffee Cup. BETH reacts with anger that Joe thought she was homeless and storms away.
JOE & BETH – Second Meet-Cute – They meet while exiting the theater, when Joe bumps into Beth, by accident and feels that this second meeting means that they were meant to be together. Beth thinks just the opposite, that he is a Clutz and maybe even following her.
JOE bumps into Beth and spills her glass of soda, staining her blouse. BETH is doubly incensed with this young man.
Inciting Incident: They are put together to work on a film project in their filmmaking class.
JOE & BETH – Attraction/Flirting – Joe compliments her in the breakout room in their filmmaking class and offers to pay her to work on his film project. Knowing that he feels something for her, but needing the money, she decides to accept.
INITIAL STATE: VOICE is an older man, who was a Shakespearean trained actor, who is homeless, because of his deep-rooted paranoia and propensity for conspiracy theories, is unable to work. KAREN, an older widow, was a trophy wife, without any experience in the working world, but is meticulous in her habits, even as a homeless person.
Turning Point: They pick two older homeless people to play the main roles in their project, promising them homes, as a result.

Act 2:

New plan: They bring the two homeless individuals, Voice and Karen to a small vacant lot where they will construct their homes while filming it.
VOICE & KAREN – MEET-CUTE MOMENT – Voice and Karen are put in the back seat of Joe’s car on the way to the lot where their tiny homes will be built and banter back and forth like two adversaries ready for the big fight.
VOICE thinks of Karen as a spoiled socialite and KAREN thinks of Voice as a crazy, stinky old man.
INITIAL CHALLENGES: JOE – He is bringing the three of them to a small narrow lot where he intends to build a couple of tiny homes and shoot a feature film in the process. BETH – She is not crazy about this project, but has agreed to come aboard, because Joe has hired her to write a script centered around these two homeless people as they attempt to house them. VOICE – Although he sees Karen as attractive, he cannot identify with her haughty, superior nature. It challenges his egotistical bent. KAREN – She is repulsed by Voice, who smells and is insulting. She agrees to this project, only if their homes are at opposite ends of this small lot.
VOICE & KAREN – Attraction/Flirting – Voice obviously loves the banter that Karen and he get involved in. They both are sharp and competitive, but the connection is obvious. Different as night and day, they are finding their Sunrise and Sunset, the more they communicate.
Plan in action: Joe and Beth, along with Voice and Karen, clear the lot, put up the tents, drill for water, plant fruit and vegetable and deal with the city and county to plan the structures and apply for building permits.
JOE & BETH – Denial – They lose their connection when Joe insists on shooting the whole project on Cell Phones documentary still, while Beth is working on a dramatic script that she feels needs actors and a director that believes in her work. Maybe they weren’t meant to work together and should let these poor homeless people go back to their encampment.
MAJOR CONFLICT/OBSTACLE: JOE – Joe starts shooting the project documentary style. He calls it Cassavetes Style and using his cell phone. BETH – Beth is upset not only that he is using a cell phone, but that he seems to have no real interest in the scenes she has written for the main two characters. VOICE – Voice is asking for his lines but is pretty good at tearing Karen comments apparent and making fun of the film that Joe is making. KAREN – Is more sympathetic with Joe’s approach but feels Beth could have picked a much better person to play opposite her than the boisterous and smelly Voice. (How in the world are they going to work together as a team!)
Midpoint Turning Point: The people in the new housing development across the street want the homeless people across the street from them evicted and the city make it very difficult for them to build two small structures on the lot.
JOE & BETH – Separation/Forced Together – Beth makes it clear that they are having problems working together in their filmmaking class, but the instructor talks her into continuing to work with Joe.
VOICE & KAREN – Denial – The two almost get to the point of fisty cups and decide that it is not worth it and maybe they should go back to their original places of residence.

Act 3:

Rethink everything: They can only put one structure on the lot, and it must be in the center of the property.
JOE & BETH – When Joe secretly tapes Beth in a very emotional state, she is incensed and refuses to talk to him, but when Voice consoles her and puts in his 2 cents, in defense of Joe, she reconsiders.
New plan: Joe and Beth propose a contest between Voice and Karen to who will live in the tiny home to be built.
VOICE & KAREN – Separation/Forced Together – Voice and Karen find out that they will not be able to have their individual homes built, they are angry, but the idea that they may be able to share a home brings them together.
Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift: The city tells them that they cannot have a permanent structure on the lot. Not even a tiny home.
JOE & BETH – Working through Issues/Differences – Joe and Beth confide in each other. Joe tells about tragic death of his mother and the fact that he thinks that his long missing father is homeless. Beth reveals that she was fired from her job and that the money that Joe was paying her keeping her afloat for a while.
VOICE & KAREN – Working through Issues/Differences – Voice reveals that he killed a gang member and is fearful that the gang is after him. Karen reveals that she has never been the bread winner and feels hopeless and helpless without her husband to support her.
SELF-REFLECTION: JOE – Realizes that because of his attraction to Beth he has offered to pay her to keep her on the project and is not treating her as an equal. BETH – Realizes that although Joe has perhaps taken on more than he can chew, he effectively trying to keep the project on budget and really wants to help the homeless. VOICE – Realizes that he really enjoys the verbal fisticuffs with Karen and is starting to respect her intellect and ideas. KAREN – Is starting to respect Voice, although she disagrees with him at every turn, she is starting to believe that she can turn him around.
ACCEPTANCE AND GROWTH: JOE – Joe allows Beth to shoot some of the scenes she has written, but of course she still has to use a cell phone. BETH – She realizes and respects Joe’s determination to make this film, a mixture of doc and narrative. VOICE – He seriously talks to Karen about his problems. KAREN – She also begins to confide in Voice.
DEMONSTRATE THE CHANGE: JOE – Joe confides in Beth about his search for his homeless father. BETH – Beth reveals that she has been evicted from her apartment and has been living in her car. VOICE – Accepts the fact that he is a bit paranoid and tells Karen that maybe the local gang is not really out to kill him. KAREN – Accepts that Voice really cares about her and that maybe she is a bit too concerned about her looks and her surroundings.
JOE & BETH – Hate/Betrayal/All Hope is Lost – With the possibility of no home being built and the time and money already spent gone to waste, makes the housing situation precarious. Beth leaves Joe after finding out that he recorded a private conversation she had with him.
VOICE & KAREN – Hate/Betrayal/All Hope is Lost – Although speaking to each other with respect and caring, they no longer feel confident that a home for them will be built. They feel the city and the neighboring homeowners are working against them and their wishes.

Act 4:

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict: Joe orders a temporary, prebuilt, tiny home on wheels and has it moved to the center of the lot. Both Voice and Karen work on it and finally decide to share it.
REUNION: Offers his home to Beth. BETH – She is seriously thinking about it. VOICE – Decides that he will share the small home with Karen. KAREN – Decides that she will share the home with Voice. (When the Tornado comes all four of them are forced to huddle together in the tiny home, during the storm)
Resolution: Just as they move into their new home a Tornado hits and while destroying the entire new home community across the street, their tiny home is left standing and the homeless people who ridiculed them ask for their help in rebuilding their community.
JOE, BETH, VOICE & KAREN – Love Happens – When a Tornado strikes both couples are forced to shelter in the tiny home built with recycled plastic water bottles. All the homes in the development across the street are destroyed and only their tiny home remains standing. Their love for each other is solidified and their homeless neighbors befriend them as well.
They are covered by the press and Joe’s homeless father arrives to reconcile with his son.

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Eugene Mandelcorn’s His Journey/Her Journey

What I learned doing this assignment is that each person involved must go through a individual transformational journey, but with two rom-coms going on at once, they do not have to go through the journey at the same time or at the same pace.

Lesson 5
ASSIGNMENT

1. Create the individual Transformational Journey for each lead character.

Each character’s Transformational Journey contains:

1. Initial state: JOE – A young man who has lost his mother in a tragic accident, inheriting her home, and fears his father who left the family when he was young is among the homeless. He aspires to be a filmmaker. BETH – Is estranged from her family who are financial insecure and while she is struggling to make a living on her own. She also aspires to be a filmmaker. VOICE – A older man, who was a Shakespearean trained actor, is homeless, and because of his paranoid, conspiratory nature, is unable to work. KAREN – An older widow, who was a trophy wife, is a meticulous homeless person.

2. Meet-Cute moment: JOE – He comes out of the theater on his cell phone reviewing the film he just saw when he bumps into Beth, spilling her drink all over her intriguing outfit. He tries to help her clean it up, but only makes things worse. BETH – Coming out of the theater to be confronted by Joe who ruins her outfit. She is a mess and has a job interview she must get to. VOICE – Is recruited from the homeless, by Beth, to be part of a film that Joe and Beth are making. He rides in the back seat of Joe’s car with Karen, whom he meets for the first time. KAREN – Recruited by Joe, she rides in the back seat of his car with Voice, kind of a terrifying blind date.

3. Initial challenges: JOE – He is bringing the three of them to a small narrow lot where he intends to build a couple of tiny homes and shoot a feature film in the process. BETH – She is not crazy about this project, but has agreed to come aboard, because Joe has hired her to write a script centered around these two homeless people as they attempt to house them. VOICE – Although he sees Karen as attractive, he cannot identify with her haughty, superior nature. It challenges his egotistical bent. KAREN – She is repulsed by Voice, who spells and is insulting. She agrees to this project, only if their homes are at opposite ends of this small lot.

4. Major conflict / Obstacle: JOE – Joe starts shooting the project documentary style. He calls it Cassavetes Style and using his cell phone. BETH – Beth is upset not only that he is using a cell phone, but that he seems to have no real interest in the scenes she had written for the main two characters. VOICE – Voice is asking for his lines but is pretty good at tearing Karen comments apparent and making fun of the film that Joe is making. KAREN – Is more sympathetic with Joe’s approach but feels Beth could have picked a much better person to play opposite her than the boisterous and smelly Voice. (How in the world are they going to work together as a team!)

5. Self-Reflection: JOE – Realizes that because of his attraction to Beth he has offered to pay her to keep her on the project and is not treating her as an equal. BETH – Realizes that although Joe has perhaps taken on more than he can chew, he effectively trying to keep the project on budget and really wants to help the homeless. VOICE – Realizes that he really enjoys the verbal fisticuffs with Karen and is starting to respect her intellect and ideas. KAREN – Is starting to respect Voice, although she disagrees with him at every turn, she is starting to believe that she can turn him around.

6. Acceptance and Growth: JOE – Joe allows Beth to shoot some of the scenes she has written, but of course she still has to use a cell phone. BETH – She realizes and respects Joe’s determination to make this film, a mixture of doc and narrative. VOICE – He seriously talks to Karen about his problems. KAREN – She also begins to confide in Voice.

7. Demonstrate the change: JOE – Joe confides in Beth about his search for his homeless father. BETH – Beth reveals that she has been evicted from her apartment and has been living in her car. VOICE – Accepts the fact that he is a bit paranoid and tells Karen that maybe the local gang is not really out to kill him. KAREN – Accepts that Voice really cares about her and that maybe she is a bit too concerned about her looks and her surroundings.

8. Reunion: JOE – Offers his home to Beth. BETH – She is seriously thinking about it. VOICE – Decides that he will share a small home with Karen. KAREN – Decides that she will share the home with Voice. (When the Tornado comes all four of them are forced to huddle together in the tiny home, during the storm)

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Eugene Mandelcorn's 7 Stages of Love:
What I learned doing this assignment is that two Rom-Coms are better than one.

1. Meet-Cute

JOE & BETH – They meet in exiting the theater, when Joe bumps into Beth, by accident and falls in love with her at first sight.
VOICE & KAREN – Voice and Karen are put in the back seat of Joe's car on the way to the lot where their tiny homes will be built and banter back and forth like two adversaries ready for the big fight.

2. Attraction/Flirting

JOE & BETH – Joe compliments her in the break out room in their filmmaking class and offers to pay her to work on his film project. Knowing that he feels something for her, she decides to accept.
VOICE & KAREN – Voice obviously loves the banter that Karen and him get involved in. They both are sharp and competitive, but the connection is obvious. Different as night and day, they are finding their Sunrise and Sunset, the more they communicate.

3. Denial

JOE & BETH – They loose their connection when Joe insists on shooting the whole project on Cell Phones documentary still, while Beth is working on a dramatic script that she feels needs actors and a director to believe in and make. Maybe they weren't ment to work together and should let these poor homeless people go back to their encampment.
VOICE & KAREN – The two almost get to the point of fisty cups and decide that it is not worth it and maybe they should go back to their original places of residence.

4. Separation/Forced Together

JOE & BETH – When Joe secretly tapes Beth in a very emotional state, she is incensed and refuses to talk to him, but when Voice consoles her and puts in his 2 cents, in defense of Joe, she reconsiders.
VOICE & KAREN – When Voice and Karen find out that they will not be able to have their individual homes built, they are angry, but the idea that they may be able to share a home brings them together.

5. Working through Issues/Differences

JOE & BETH – Joe and Beth confide in each other. Joe tells about tragic death of his mother and the fact that he thinks that his long missing father is homeless. Beth reveals that she was fired from her job and that the money that Joe was paying her kept her afloat for a while, but she ended up getting evicted and is now living in her car.
VOICE & KAREN – Voice reveals that he killed a gang member and is fearful that the gang is after him. Karen reveals that she has never been the bread winner and feels hopeless and helpless without her husband to support her.

6. Hate/Betrayal/All Hope is Lost

JOE & BETH – With the possibility of no home being built and the time and money already spent gone to waste, makes the housing situation precarious.
VOICE & KAREN – Although speaking to each other with respect and caring, they no longer feel confident that a home for them will be built. They feel the city and the neighboring home owners are working against them and their wishes

7. Love Happens

JOE, BETH, VOICE & KAREN – When a Tornando strikes both couples are forced to shelter in the tiny home built with recycled plastic water bottles was delivered to the small lot. All the homes in the development across the street are destroyed and only their tiny home remains standing. Their love for each other is solidified and their homeless neighbors befriend them as well.

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Eugene Mandelcorn’s Rom Com Project

Lesson 3

What I learned doing this assignment is that I have incorporated a big bold story into this double rom-com.

ASSIGNMENT

1. Brainstorm at least 5 ideas for each of these and select the one or combination you like best for your bigger story.

A. What interesting world could this movie/show be set in?
The world of filmmaking.
The world of homelessness.
The world of construction.
The world of politics.
The world of ecological change.
B. What major conflict could be happening?
The conflict of making a narrative feature vs. a documentary.
The conflict of homeless living near a community of new homes.
The conflict of trying to maneuver complex zoning and planning rules.
The conflict of surviving a natural disaster.
The conflict of dealing with a major dream come true.
C. What intriguing situation could these characters be engaged in?
Building a home for the homeless.
Deciding what homeless person will occupy the structure.
Finding a way to have the homeless be self-sufficient.
The formerly homeless helping people who are newly homeless.
Surviving a natural disaster.

2. Turn that bigger story into a 3-Act or 4-Act structure.

Act 1:

Opening: Joe and Beth meet at a film screening.
Inciting Incident: They are put together to work on a film project in their filmmaking class.
Turning Point: They pick two older homeless people to play the main roles in their project, promising them homes, as a result.

Act 2:

New plan: They bring the two homeless individuals, Voice and Karen to a small vacant lot where they will construct their homes while filming it.
Plan in action: Joe and Beth, along with Voice and Karen, clear the lot, put up the tents, drill for water, plant fruit and vegetable and deal with the city and country to plan the structures and apply for building permits.
Midpoint Turning Point: The people in the new housing development across the street want the homeless people across the street from them evicted and the city make it very difficult for them to build two small structures on the lot.

Act 3:

Rethink everything: They can only put one structure on the lot, and it must be in the center of the property.
New plan: Joe and Beth propose a contest between Voice and Karen to who will live in the tiny home to be built.
Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift: The city tells them that they cannot have a permanent structure on the lot. Not even a tiny home.

Act 4:

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict: Joe orders a temporary, prebuilt, tiny home on wheels and has it moved to the center of the lot. Both Voice and Karen work on it and finally decide to share it.
Resolution: Just as they move into their new home a Tornado hits and while destroying the entire new home community across the street, their tiny is left standing and the homeless people who ridiculed them ask for their help in rebuilding their community.

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Eugene Mandelcorn's Rom-Com Project
What I learned doing this assignment is that these characters really seem real to me. I can identify with them.

Who is She? BETH – An aspiring filmmaker who lost her survival job and is about to be evicted from her residence.
KAREN – A older widow who was a trophy wife, who lost everything when her husband died and has ended up on the street.
Who is He? JOE – An aspiring filmmaker who lost his mother in a tragic accident and inherited her house and a vacant lot. He wants to find his father who left when he was young as he believes the man is homeless.
VOICE – An older Shakespearan trained actor, who has not worked for quite a while and is homeless. He still has great ambitions, but is his own worst enemy.
What makes them lovable?
JOE – He wants to reunite with his father. He has no-one in his life, right now. He's determined to solve the homeless problem, but needs help. He falls in love with Beth at first sight.
BETH – Brought up without much material possessions , she wants to make it on her own in the film industry. She is looking for that big break, always trying to be positive. She is having money problems, but always looking for a solution.
VOICE – He is everything one would turn away from. Old, Smelly, Egotistical, Loud, but has a personality that is magnetic. He was born with Charisma and is a great storyteller, believing so much in his stories, that he can convince some of the people, some of the time, that they are true.
KAREN – A very attractive older woman, who was financially, taken care of most of her life. She kept house and kept her husband happy, but never herself. She feels like she has lived a beautiful nightmare with only the nightmare left. She is looking for something to make her feel whole, and we feel her longing.

What attracts them to each other?
JOE & BETH – Joe falls in love with Beth at first sight. They watched the same movie, in the same theater. It turns out to be his favorite, but not hers. She is very reluntant to make a loving connection, but is pulled in by the offer to be paid for her work on his project and get a credit on it, as well, to perhaps forward her career and pay her bills.
VOICE & KAREN – Voice is so obnoxious to most people who avoid him, because of his negative traits that he secretly enjoys the verbal sparing matches he has with Karen and obviously feels sparks in their adversary relationship. Karen sees the possibilities in Voice, which he may not be aware of, and although repulsed by him in someways, is attracted to him in others. The negative, positive, attraction.
What needs does each fulfill for the other?
JOE & BETH – Beth fulfills for Joe the connection, both physical and emotional, that he is looking for. Joe fulfills the financial and artistic solutions Beth is looking for and eventually realizes they are also physically and emotionally compatible.
VOICE & KAREN – KAREN never really had much communication with her late husband, he never confided in her. Her banter, back and forth with Voice, is excellerating comparied to her previous relationship. Voice, although secretly attracted to Karen, also enjoys their banter. He is often ignored or shunned by people, who don't verbalize what they think. Even though they think differently, they end up seeing how much they have in common.

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ASSIGNMENT: Eugene Mandelcorn’s Rom Com Project
LESSON 1
What I learned in doing this assignment is that the characters in this rom-com are more compicated than I originally thought.

Create your Concept and Conventions

1. Starting with whatever idea you have, fill in the blanks to create a concept.

Two People Who Belong Together: Joe is an aspiring filmmaker and Beth is an aspiring screenwriter. Voice is a elderly right-wing homeless man and Karen a left-wing homeless woman.
How Are They Separated: When Joe and Beth meet at a movie theater, Joe spills a drink on her and although he is attracted to her Beth wants nothing to do with him. When Voice and Karen are introduced they despise each other. They argue and try to keep away from each other.
What Forces Them together: Joe and Beth are forced together by the instructor of an Internet Film School. Voice and Karen are forced together by Joe and Beth in the making of their film.
Issues to be Resolved: Joe must get over the death of his parents and the search for homeless twin. Beth must feel that she can be a successful, and truly loved for herself, even after loosing her apartment and living in her car.
On Their Journey of Love: The 2 couples are forced to resolve their problems and survive a disaster together to become mentors to their former antagonists.
2. Then fill in the blanks to create your conventions. Even though some of these are the same, it is worth looking at them in the context of the conventions.

Experience of Falling In Love: In the relationship between Joe and Beth, Joe is the pursuer and Beth is reluctant, but eventually comes to care for Joe. Voice and Karen are thrown together by Joe and Beth and want nothing to do with each other.
The Journey of Love: Joe and Beth have different ideas of what the film they are making together should be like. Arguments eventually lead to mistrust and almost forced separation by a force of nature, but Joe saves Beth and they weather the storm together with Voice and Karen, who also find that opposites can attract.
Relationship Set-up: Joe meets Beth after the screening of a class assignment. He spills a drink on her dress and she wants nothing to do with him. Joe and Beth meet Voice and Karen separately and put them together in their film.
Issues each must Resolve: Joe must deal with the sudden death of his parents and the search for his homeless twin brother. Beth must deal with her finance problems, loosing her job, getting evicted from her apartment and living in her car. Voice must realize he is living in an alternative reality and it is the reason he is homeless. Karen must deal with the fact that she has never learned to be in control of her life.
Separation: Joe and Beth are separated by their artistic differences as well as their financial state. Voice and Karen are separated by a deep hatred for each others appearance and world view.
How will Comedy be Expressed: The conflicts between the couples who are thrown together and at first don’t seem to get along. There is a great deal of irony and misplaced put-downs in their conversation and actions.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

1. Name? Eugene Mandelcorn – firstfeatures@mail.com
2. How many scripts you’ve written? Stopped counting after the first dozen!
3. What you hope to get out of the class? To make my double romcom, that I plan to shoot this year, the best it can possibly be.
4. Something unique, special, strange or unusual about you? I shot my first short and my first feature at the same time.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

What I learned in viewing the Prado and Will Hunting character scenes is that my four characters have very different personalities and view points on life that must be deftly revealed in the opening scenes of my script.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

Will’s Traits

1) Well Read

2) Photographic Mind

3) Physically Powerful

4) Not Afraid of Anyone

5) Willing to Step in and Help a Friend

On the 2nd Viewing

1) Skylar was defending Chuckie: She could emphasize and understand his struggle to make a connection.

2) A Harvard Bar is a great place to make a connection. A place to socialize in a very strict school environment.

3) Will is very aware that this guy is trying to impress Skylar by putting down Chuckie to make himself look smart.

4) Even before Will puts the competition into an intellectual corner, Skylar has put the guy down for his actions, and when he strikes back by trying to put Will down as a nobody who will always be a nobody, Will offers to settle the matter outside, which ends the debate with a physical threat.

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• This reply was modified 2 years, 5 months ago by  Eugene Mandelcorn.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

1) Eugene Mandelcorn

2) 20+ Scripts

3) Get a script that I plan to produce in 2023 written with dynamic characters.

4) I ran an International Filmmakers Organization for 20 years and a Sales & Marketing Company that sold films around the world for 11. I am now involved in organizing an International Studio Without Borders or Walls.

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[Eugene Mandelcorn]

Eugene Mandelcorn “I agree to the terms of this release form.”

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S ACT 2 MIDDLE SCENES (Lesson 14)

What I learned doing this assignment is that it is not getting any easier.

INT. OBEROENDE – PATRICK’S CAMPAIGN HEADQUARTERS – 1ST FLOOR – L.A. – DAY

Beginning: Patrick is on the computer and with the help of Celeste they are trying to find out how the FBI could possibly believe that Seco had anything to do with the assassination attempt.

Middle: They finally realize that the only connecting link must be the assassin.

End: They finally locate his name and the mental hospital he has been confined to.

INT. MENTAL INSTITUTION – L.A. – DAY

Beginning: Celeste & Patrick question the man that shot Patrick.

Middle: He is very evasive concerning the assassination and their probing questions.

End: One of the hospital staff finally tells them that their time is up after little progress.

EXT. ANGEL CITY – L.A. – DAY

Beginning: Some of the first homeless are being interviewed to possibly be admitted to Angel City.

Middle: One of the homeless was a resident at the same hospital as the assassin.

End: He tells them how the police tried to get him to change his story on a crime he committed and they would get him out of the asylum. This story gives Celeste an idea.

INT. OBEROENDE – PATRICK’S CAMPAIGN HEADQUARTERS – 1ST FLOOR – L.A. – DAY

Patrick is on the computer while Celeste looks over his shoulder watching the screen.

CELESTE

Is there anything on the case against Seco. Anything at all.

PATRICK

It looks like their must be some apparent witness that gave the police some damaging testimony.

CELESTE

Somebody at the scene who gave false testimony against Seco?

PATRICK

I guess so.

CELESTE

It couldn’t be any of our people. Maybe the assassin, the mental patient?

PATRICK

Maybe.

Patrick searches the material on his attempted assassination and finds the name of the assassin and the mental hospital he has been committed to.

PATRICK

I found him, he’s in the at Metropolitan State Hospital.

INT. MENTAL INSTITUTION – L.A. – DAY

Celeste & Patrick sit across from the MENTAL PATIENT, who seems suspicious of them.

CELESTE

Do you remember Patrick Lee?

MENTAL PATIENT (looking away, not making eye contact)

The name sounds familiar.

CELESTE

Do you know why you are here?

MENTAL PATIENT

Cause I have problems.

CELESTE

Do you remember having a gun?

MENTAL PATIENT

Yes.

PATRICK

Do you remember shooting me?

MENTAL PATIENT

Oh, that. That Patrick Lee.

CELESTE

Remember that day?

MENTAL PATIENT

Yeah.

CELESTE

Did you talk to anybody about that day?

MENTAL PATIENT

They questioned me.

CELESTE

When? Recently?

WE SEE a HOSPITAL WORKER standing behind Celeste.

HOSPITAL WORKER

I’m sorry your time is up. He has to take his medication now.

CELESTE

Can we talk to him after his medication.

HOSPITAL WORKER

I’m afraid it would not be very productive to wait. He won’t be very coherent after taking his meds.

EXT. ANGEL CITY – L.A. – DAY

Celeste & Patrick are interviewing a POSSIBLE RESIDENT of “Angel City.” They sit at what looks like a picnic bench.

CELESTE

How long have you been homeless?

POSSIBLE RESIDENT

Almost 6 months now.

CELESTE

And did you end up on Skid Row?

POSSIBLE RESIDENT

I don’t call it by that name. After all, I don’t drink or take drugs.

PATRICK

How did you end up on the streets? What happened?

POSSIBLE RESIDENT

Well, it’s a long story, but I was previously a resident of Metro.

CELESTE

Metropolitan State Hospital?

POSSIBLE RESIDENT

Yes.

CELESTE

How long were you there?

POSSIBLE RESIDENT

About a year.

CELESTE

And?

POSSIBLE RESIDENT

It’s a long story…

CELESTE

Go ahead…

POSSIBLE RESIDENT

Well I was involved in some criminal activities and I was found to be incompetent to stand trial. I was committed to a mental institution.

CELESTE

And you were released without having to go back to court.

POSSIBLE RESIDENT

Well, I couldn’t stand Metro. I had to get out. I made a deal with the cops. I named names. I thought they were going to give me pigeon protection, a new identity and a place to live. No, they just left me out on the streets to fend for myself.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S CHRONOLOGICAL EDIT

What I learned doing this assignment and the entire course was that it has a lot of bugs that have to be worked out. I got pushed out of a number of lessons and had to just stop at one point, temporarily. Tried to get on again later to continue, but again it would not let me enter my material.

1. I would say it did get me to put together the ideas for an entire screenplay, but because of all the technical problems with this new site, I had to work outside the class to work on the screenplay. I could read the assignments, but was unable to functionally complete them.

2. I think I will still complete the 1st Draft of the screenplay outside of this course and may bring on a more experienced writer to work on a revised draft with me.

3. I like the mixture of the Profound Screenplay format and the 20% idea, but the course structure itself was not easy to follow and I have taken several courses in the old system. So in this case I believe the New Ways have not yet advanced to the level of the Old Ways.

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[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S ACT 2 REACTION TO TP 1 (Lesson 13)

What I learned doing this assignment is that I am very confused about the framework of this class. The structure seems to be off center. Maybe that is the purpose of it.

Inciting Incident: Patrick Announces to a huge audience that the land that they are standing on will become “Angel City” the solution to L.A.’s homeless crisis.

Turning point: Celeste and Patrick are on the cusp of completing “Angel City” when a pivotal member of the team, Seco, is arrested right in front of them.

Reaction in Act 2

INT. L.A. JAIL – FRONT DESK – DAY

Celeste, Patrick and Samuel approach the DESK SERGEANT.

DESK SERGEANT

How can I help you?

CELESTE

Our friend Seco BrightCloud was taken into custody a short time ago. We would like to see him.

DESK SERGEANT

(looking over the paperwork)

I’m afraid no one can see him right now.

SAMUEL

He’s my son!

DESK SERGEANT

No one can see him. He’s being interrogated by the FBI.

CELESTE

What is this all about?

DESK SERGEANT

It’s a federal offense…Conspiracy…

SAMUEL

We can’t bail him out.

DESK SERGEANT

There’s no bail on this offense.

CELESTE

What is this Conspiracy charge all about?

DESK SERGEANT

Apparently, an assassination attempt on a Patrick Lee.

PATRICK LEE

That’s me!

SAMUEL

This is crazy. Where did you get this idea?

DESK SERGEANT

I’m afraid, I can’t say any more. I’ve said too much already.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S FINISHED ACT 1 (Lesson 12)

What I learned doing this assignment is although I am not a great writer, I can still put stuff down on paper and fill pages, if necessary.

(New Scenes)

INT. NEWSROOM – ANY U.S. CITY – DAY

Beginning: A Reporter questions Republican Presidential Nominee, Senator Demsey

Middle: Demsey claims to be using campaign funds to solve problems.

End: Demsey pooh poohs Lee’s chances as a Write-In Candidate for President.

INT. NEWSROOM – ANY U.S. CITY – DAY

A NEW COMMENTATOR is questioning Republican Presidential Nominee, Senator Demsey.

NEWS COMMENTATOR

Senator Demsey, I understand that you are now using campaign funds to solve problems facing you constituents. What problems might those be?

SENATOR DEMSEY

Yes, we are in the process of identifying those problems. And as soon as we have done so, we will make our solutions known.

NEW COMMENTATOR

Have you decided that it is the only way to compete with Candidate Lee?

SENATOR DEMSEY

Of course not. It’s a good idea, that’s all. I still don’t think Mr. Lee has any chance of winning, after all he has not qualified for any ballot in any state, as far as I know.

EXT. POLITICAL STAGE – ANY CITY U.S.A. – DAY

Beginning: Governor McCadden, the Democratic Nominee for President speaks to a large audience.

Middle: He puts down Mr. Lee as being disloyal to the U.S. with his first order of business, being his own nation of Oberoende.

End: He ends his presentation degrading Lee as a Pacifist, not the kind of person to run the U.S.

EXT. POLITICAL STAGE – ANY CITY U.S.A – DAY

GOVERNOR MCCADDEN, the Democratic nominee for President is speaking to a large audience of his followers on the subject of Patrick Lee.

GOVERNOR MCCADDEN

\\I don’t think Lee could tie his shoe laces without the help of Ms. SeedlingSun. And as far as his being a Patriot, I think he owes his loyalty to his Nation of Oberoende, not to the Stars and Stripes. And his Pacifist leanings put him in direct conflict with the history and foundation of this great nation.

(There is an strong resounding cheer in response to his words)

ACT 1

EXT. PLATFORM BEHIND POLITICAL STAGE – L.A. – NIGHT

Presidential candidate, PATRICK LEE, approaching 40, Asian American, legally blind and autistic is backstage with Celeste, a 40ish attractive Native American, as they prepare for his first rally before a huge audience. Pat is pacing back and forth apparently trying to practice his lines.

CELESTE

Are you nervous?

PATRICK

Yes.

CELESTE

What’s bothering you?

PATRICK

The whole government is coming down on me.

CELESTE

Don’t worry, the establishment is getting desperate. You came out of nowhere and they don’t know how to deal with you. Trust me, they’re grabbing at straws, they don’t have anything on you.

PATRICK

How do you know?

CELESTE

Believe me, I know.

PATRICK

Okay…(pause)

Should I wear my NuEyes?

CELESTE

I thought we discussed that. It can be very distracting. We want the audience to see your eyes, even if there is no real eye contact. You will move your head from side to side as you speak to give the impression you are speaking to everyone.

PATRICK

You don’t want me to see them?

CELESTE

Seeing all those people could trigger your Asperger’s.

PATRICK

What about the sound of the crowd, couldn’t that trigger it?

CELESTE

Possibly, but the earplugs should help, they won’t drown out the crowd completely, but they’ll muffle it a bit.(pause)

Remember to wait for the end of a response from the crowd before starting your next line. Listen for their audio cues.

PATRICK

You could do a much better speech.

CELESTE

It’s all based on your ideas. You’ve come up with the solutions. I’ve only helped you to implement them.

PATRICK

Maybe your vision was right. Maybe we should switch places. Maybe you should be running for President.

CELESTE

I thought I was the teacher, but I realize now that I learned more from you… about being a good President.(pause)

And I’m still learning…(pause)

Don’t worry, I can wait 8 years…

(WE HEAR the audience begin a chant…Patrick Lee…Patrick Lee…Patrick Lee…Celeste gives him a peck on the check and walks him onto the stage and towards the podium.)

EXT. LARGE OUTDOOR STAGE – NIGHT

Patrick Lee takes the stage and is met by a resounding roar from the crowd which almost knocks him off his feet. He is frozen in his tracks as SAMUEL BRIGHTCLOUD, a Cherokee Elder, Introduces him.

BRIGHTCLOUD

The next President of the United States, Patrick “Dark Horse” Lee.

Samuel deftly leads Patrick to the podium and quickly moves into the background to join Celeste.

It is obvious that Pat is trying to deal with his nerves as he fumbles with the mike and prepares to speak.

PATRICK(hesitant)

As you all know…I am not a man of words.(pause)

I may not see you, but I can hear you, like the thunder in the night.

(pause during a thunderous applause)

I have been told that this audience comprises all political parties, all genders, all ages, all races and creeds. People from every state in the U.S. and many countries around world. Please cheer for yourselves, for you represent the change that this world wants and needs.

(a long loud cheer)

I have run a novel campaign and I have very seldom spoken out. Whatever we do in this campaign must have more than one purpose and this gathering is no exception.(pause)

You are standing on another solution. The land that was cleared for this rally will be the solution to the homeless crisis. It will be called “Angel City” and will eliminate “Skid Row” from the streets of L.A.

Once the solution is tested here, it will spread to cities throughout the United States and eventually around the world.

(long cheer)

I would like to get a bit personal for a moment. When I was a young man I was very naive, but I eventually fell into a routine that I felt comfortable with and that made my connections with other people very limited, at best.

Computers and other technologies made it easier and easier to limit my one on one, personal communications. I must admit I made a number of mistakes in my life.

(the audience listens intently)

When I got older I started to miss the companionship that others took for granted. I had a relationship with a much younger woman. I guess, like many others, I wanted to regain my youth, but more than that I wanted to have a family, a legacy, so that others would know that I existed, to leave something behind that would carry my story forward.(pause)

As you might guess, the relationship did not work out, but it taught me something, it taught me to be independent. You have to be independent and secure before you can reach out to others, work with them and learn how to be interdependent…to work together, to accomplish great things.(pause)

I just learned today, that the two candidates representing the major political parties have accepted my challenge and from this point forward will be using their campaign donations to solve problems and their coffers are much bigger than mine.

This makes me very happy.(another roar from the crowd)

Something else makes me even more happy and secure. I finally have found my family…(pause)

You…you are my family. And I know, even if I do not win this election…

(The crowd begins to Chant: Write-In…Patrick Lee…Write-In Patrick Lee…Patrick Lee…Patrick Lee…Right into the White House…Patrick Lee right into the White House…Write-In…Write-In…Write-In…)

PATRICK (CONT’D)

Even if I don’t win this election, I know that you will carry on my ideas. My plans will move forward, in the United States and around the world. You…you are my legacy.

Even after I am gone and only a memory, You…You will carry on…

(An even louder roar from the crowd. And they begin to Chant: “We The People…Love Lee” “We The People…Love Lee” “Love Lee…Love Lee”…)

WE SEE tears in Patrick’s eyes, and they begin to roll down his cheeks as the huge audience continues to roar in response.

(And the roar dissolves into a Third Chant: “Patrick Lee…Lee’d The Way…Patrick Lee…Lee’d The Way” and WE SEE the audience is exercising their vote by wearing Purple and stretching out elastic exercise bands that read “Lee’d The Way” in Large Purple letters.)

(The chant continues as the Camera rises above the crowd to reveal how large it is…and the chant continues in the background…”Lee’d The Way…Lee’d The Way.”)

INT. CITY HALL – L.A. – DAY

Celeste and Patrick sit at the table across from Los Angeles City Planning Department Officials who are looking over detailed plans for “Angel City,” a development to house over 50,000 residents.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

You really plan to house the population of Skid Row in these units.

CELESTE

That’s the idea.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #2

What are they constructed of?

PATRICK

Recycled plastic.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #2

What if there was a storm? How would they hold up?

PATRICK

Much better than standard construction. They can withstand a hurricane, a flood, an earthquake, they’re even fireproof.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

What about the solar panels?

CELESTE

Incase of a disaster they fold up to the sides of the walls and are automatically clamped down.

(We see the detailed drawing that illustrates what she is talking about)

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #2

They look like birds.

PATRICK (correcting him)

Angels.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #2

All well and good, but if we give you this permit, what proof do we have that you will finish the project.

CELESTE

When we purchased the land, we already had all the funding in place to build it.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #2

And the funding to run the site, on a continuous basis.

CELESTE

The City of L.A. will fund the maintenance of the facility.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

I don’t think the City is going to like that.

CELESTE

We are getting rid of Skid Row. Do you know how much the City spends to clean-up Skid Row each year?

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

Yes, quite a substantial amount.

CELESTE

Well it will cost less to maintain “Angel City.”

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

Are you sure about that?

CELESTE

Do you know who planned it? Mr. Lee, here planned it. He did all the calculations.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

(he looks down at the name on the blueprints and then at Patrick Lee)

Are you “The Patrick Lee?”

CELESTE

Yes, he is, and I’m Celeste SeedlingSun.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #2

Well, why didn’t you say so…

EXT. EMPTY LOT – L.A. – DAY

They’re breaking ground on “Angel City.” Prefabbed recycled cubes, 10′ x 10′ x 10′ are being lowered onto the site about 20 feet apart. Ten foot solar wings are being attached to the opposite sides of each cube, extending from the roof to the ground next to the solar wing of the adjoining cube.

The flat roofs with built in ladders attached to them are having top soil poured onto them and evenly spread over the 100 sq. ft. surface.

We see both Celeste and Patrick supervising the construction of the City.

MONTAGE

We see progress as “Angel City” unfolds like the transformation of a caterpillar into a butterfly.

INT. NEWSROOM – ANY U.S. CITY – DAY

A NEW COMMENTATOR is questioning Republican Presidential Nominee, Senator Demsey.

NEWS COMMENTATOR

Senator Demsey, I understand that you are now using campaign funds to solve problems facing you constituents. What problems might those be?

SENATOR DEMSEY

Yes, we are in the process of identifying those problems. And as soon as we have done so, we will make our solutions known.

NEW COMMENTATOR

Have you decided that it is the only way to compete with Candidate Lee?

SENATOR DEMSEY

Of course not. It’s a good idea, that’s all. I still don’t think Mr. Lee has any chance of winning, after all he has not qualified for any ballot in any state, as far as I know.

EXT. POLITICAL STAGE – ANY CITY U.S.A – DAY

GOVERNOR MCCADDEN, the Democratic nominee for President is speaking to a large audience of his followers on the subject of Patrick Lee.

GOVERNOR MCCADDEN

I don’t think Lee could tie his shoe laces without the help of Ms. SeedlingSun. And as far as his being a Patriot, I think he owes his loyalty to his Nation of Oberoende, not to the Stars and Stripes. And his Pacifist leanings put him in direct conflict with the history and foundation of this great nation.

(There is an strong resounding cheer in response to his words)

EXT. ANGEL CITY – L.A. – DAY

It it seven days later and a CITY INSPECTOR is with Celeste and Patrick, who are flanked by Samuel and SECO BRIGHTCLOUD, early 30’s.

CITY INSPECTOR

I am supposed to inspect your progress.

CELESTE

Well, it’s finished.

CITY INSPECTOR

Your permit is only 7 days old. You’re not telling me you built this in a week?

PATRICK

Yes.

SAMUEL

With a little help from his friends.

CITY INSPECTOR

I am going to have to call in a whole team of inspectors to check everything before you open this up to the residents.

SECO

How long will that take?

CITY INSPECTOR

Probably more than 7 days.

(WE SEE a POLICEMAN come up behind Seco BrightCloud)

(Seco turns as the Cop addresses him)

POLICEMAN

Are you Seco BrightCloud?

SECO

Yes.

POLICEMAN

Mr. BrightCloud, you’re under arrest.

SECO

For what?

POLICEMAN

(putting handcuffs on Seco)

For conspiracy…

SAMUEL

That’s my son your arresting. This is crazy.

POLICEMAN

You’re welcome to follow me to the station. I’m just doing my job.

CELESTE (sternly)

Don’t worry, Seco, we’ll get you out.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S TURNING POINT 1 SCENE (Lesson 11)

What I learned doing this assignment is that my inciting incident and turning point happen in the same Scene. I will have to add several scenes to separate them or choose another inciting incident.

Turning Point 1 Outline

EXT. CONSTRUCTION SITE – ANGEL CITY – DAY

BEGINNING: L.A. City Inspector is surprised to see “Angel City” for the most part, completed.

MIDDLE: The Inspector informs them that a whole team of inspectors will have to be assigned to the project to approve of everything that has been done. It could take some time.

END: As the Inspector starts to explain the next steps that have to be taken, Seco, Celeste and Patrick’s bodyguard, is arrested and handcuffed by the police. Celeste promises to help Seco.

Turning Point 1 Scene:

EXT. CONSTRUCTION SITE – ANGEL CITY – DAY

It it seven days later and a CITY INSPECTOR is with Celeste and Patrick, who are flanked by SAMUEL and SECO BRIGHTCLOUD.

CITY INSPECTOR

I am supposed to inspect your progress.

CELESTE

Well, it’s finished.

CITY INSPECTOR

Your permit is only 7 days old. You’re not telling me you built this is a week?

PATRICK

Yes.

SAMUEL

With a little help from his friends.

CITY INSPECTOR

I am going to have to call in a whole team of inspectors to check everything before you open this up to the new residents.

SECO

How long will that take?

CITY INSPECTOR

Probably more than 7 days.

(WE SEE a POLICEMAN come up behind Seco BrightCloud)

(Seco turns as the Cop addresses him)

POLICEMAN

Are you Seco BrightCloud?

SECO

Yes.

POLICEMAN

Mr. BrightCloud, you’re under arrest.

SECO

For what?

POLICEMAN

(putting handcuffs on Seco)

Conspiracy…

SAMUEL

That’s my son. You can’t arrest him.

POLICEMAN

Just doing my duty. You can follow me to the station if you want.

CELESTE

Don’t worry Seco, we’ll get you out of this

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S INCITING INCIDENT (Lesson 10)

What I learned doing this assignment is that the inciting incident could be much stronger, but this will do as a place keeper for the time being.

INT. CITY HALL – L.A. – DAY

Beginning: Patrick & Celeste have a meeting with the Los Angeles City Planning Department about the New Project they have proposed “Angel City” a solution to the homeless problem.

Middle: The officials seem confused about this proposal until Celeste tells them who Patrick Lee really is.

End: They okay the project to go to the second stage of development.

Inciting Incident:

EXT. EMPTY LOT – L.A. – DAY

Beginning: They break ground on “Angel City.”

Middle: We see that Celeste with Patrick by her side is supervising the building of these square structures. The units are 10 foot cubes with two large solar panels extending from the roof to the ground on opposite sides and with a ladder to a garden on the roof.

End: The City of some 60,000 units is completed in only 7 days, Seco is arrested on site.

INT. CITY HALL – L.A. – DAY

Celeste and Patrick sit at the table across from Los Angeles City Planning Department Officials who are looking over detailed plans for “Angel City,” a development to house over 50,000 residents.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

You really plan to house the population of Skid Row in these units.

CELESTE

That’s the idea.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #2

What are they constructed of?

PATRICK

Recycled plastic.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #2

What if there was a storm? How would they hold up?

PATRICK

Much better than standard construction. They can withstand a hurricane, a flood, an earthquake, they’re even fireproof.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

What about the solar panels?

CELESTE

Incase of a disaster they fold up to the sides of the walls and are automatically clamped down.

(We see the detailed drawing that illustrates what she is talking about)

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #2

All well and good, but if we give you this permit, what proof do we have that you will finish the project.

CELESTE

When we purchased the land, we already had all the funding in place to build it.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #2

And the funding to run the site, on a continuous basis.

CELESTE

The City of L.A. will fund the maintenance of the facility.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

I don’t think the City is going to like that.

CELESTE

We are getting rid of Skid Row. Do you know how much the City spends to clean Skid Row each year?

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

Yes, quite a substantial amount.

CELESTE

Well it will cost less to maintain “Angel City.”

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

Are you sure about that?

CELESTE

Do you know who planned it? Mr. Lee, here planned it.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #1

(he looks down at the blueprints)

Are you “The Patrick Lee?”

CELESTE

Yes, he is, and I’m Celeste SeedlingSun.

L.A. PLANNING OFFICIAL #2

Well, why didn’t you say so…

Inciting Incident:

EXT. EMPTY LOT – L.A. – DAY

They’re breaking ground on “Angel City.” Prefabbed recycled cubes, 10′ x 10′ x 10′ are being lowered onto the site about 20 feet apart. Ten foot solar wings are being attached to the opposite sides of each cube, extending from the roof to the ground next to the solar wing of the adjoining cube.

The flat roofs with built in ladders attached to them are having top soil poured onto them and evenly spread over the 100 sq. ft. surface.

We see both Celeste and Patrick supervising the construction of the City.

MONTAGE

We see progress as “Angel City” unfolds like the transformation of a caterpillar into a butterfly.

EXT. ANGEL CITY – L.A. – DAY

It it seven days later and a CITY INSPECTOR is with Celeste and Patrick, who are flanked by Samuel and SECO BRIGHTCLOUD, early 30’s.

CITY INSPECTOR

I am supposed to be inspect your progress.

CELESTE

Well, it’s finished.

CITY INSPECTOR

Your permit is only 7 days old. You’re not telling me you built this in a week?

PATRICK

Yes.

SAMUEL

With a little help from his friends.

CITY INSPECTOR

I am going to have to call in a whole team of inspectors to check everything before you open this up to the residents.

SECO

How long will that take?

CITY INSPECTOR

Probably more than 7 days.

(WE SEE a POLICEMAN come up behind Seco BrightCloud)

(Seco turns as the Cop addresses him)

POLICEMAN

Are you Seco BrightCloud?

SECO

Yes.

POLICEMAN

Mr. BrightCloud, you’re under arrest.

SECO

For what?

POLICEMAN

(putting handcuffs on Seco)

For conspiracy…

SAMUEL

That’s my son your arresting. This is crazy.

POLICEMAN

You’re welcome to follow me to the station. I’m just doing my job.

CELESTE (sternly)

Don’t worry, Seco, we’ll get you out.

• This reply was modified 4 years, 1 month ago by  Eugene Mandelcorn.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S ACT 1: OPENING SCENES (Lesson 9)

What I learned doing this assignment is that the first step in anything is the hardest. Up until now it was only preparation, but now I am actually embarking on my journey, and it’s “scary.”

ACT 1:

The Opening:

EXT. PLATFORM BEHIND POLITICAL STAGE – L.A. – NIGHT

Beginning: Patrick Lee is nervous about speaking at his first major rally. Celeste gives him advice.

Middle: Patrick feels that Celeste could give a much better speech.

End: Celeste tells Patrick that he has taught her more about how to be a good President than she has taught him. She tells him she is willing to wait 8 years to occupy the Oval Office.

EXT. LARGE OUTDOOR STAGE – NIGHT

Beginning: Sam BrightCloud, Cherokee Elder and Celeste’s Mentor, introduces Patrick Lee to the crowd.

Middle: Patrick gives an impressive Speech.

End: Patrick is emotional moved by the audience’s reaction and tear-up.

EXT. PLATFORM BEHIND POLITICAL STAGE – L.A. – NIGHT

Presidential candidate, PATRICK LEE, approaching 40, Asian American, legally blind and autistic is backstage with Celeste, a 40ish attractive Native American, as they prepare for his first rally before a huge audience. Pat is pacing back and forth apparently trying to practice his lines.

CELESTE

Are you nervous?

PATRICK

Yes.

CELESTE

What’s bothering you?

PATRICK

The whole government is coming down on me.

CELESTE

Don’t worry, the establishment is getting desperate. You came out of nowhere and they don’t know how to deal with you. Trust me, they’re grabbing at straws, they don’t have anything on you.

PATRICK

How do you know?

CELESTE

Believe me, I know.

PATRICK

Okay…(pause)

Should I wear my NuEyes?

CELESTE

I thought we discussed that. It can be very distracting. We want the audience to see your eyes, even if there is no real eye contact. You will move your head from side to side as you speak to give the impression you are speaking to everyone.

PATRICK

You don’t want me to see them?

CELESTE

Seeing all those people could trigger your Asperger’s.

PATRICK

What about the sound of the crowd, couldn’t that trigger it?

CELESTE

Possibly, but the earplugs should help, they won’t drown out the crowd completely, but they’ll muffle it a bit.(pause)

Remember to wait for the end of a response from the crowd before starting your next line. Listen for their audio cues.

PATRICK

You could do a much better speech.

CELESTE

It’s all based on your ideas. You’ve come up with the solutions. I’ve only helped you to implement them.

PATRICK

Maybe your vision was right. Maybe we should switch places. Maybe you should be running for President.

CELESTE

I thought I was the teacher, but I realize now that I learned more from you… about being a good President.(pause)

And I’m still learning…(pause)

Don’t worry, I can wait 8 years…

(WE HEAR the audience begin a chant…Patrick Lee…Patrick Lee…Patrick Lee…Celeste gives him a peck on the check and walks him onto the stage and towards the podium.)

EXT. LARGE OUTDOOR STAGE – NIGHT

Patrick Lee takes the stage and is met by a resounding roar from the crowd which almost knocks him off his feet. He is frozen in his tracks as SAMUEL BRIGHTCLOUD, a Cherokee Elder, Introduces him.

BRIGHTCLOUD

The next President of the United States, Patrick “Dark Horse” Lee.

Samuel deftly leads Patrick to the podium and quickly moves into the background to join Celeste.

It is obvious that Pat is trying to deal with his nerves as he fumbles with the mike and prepares to speak.

PATRICK(hesitant)

As you all know…I am not a man of words.(pause)

I may not see you, but I can hear you, like the thunder in the night.

(pause during a thunderous applause)

I have been told that this audience comprises all political parties, all genders, all ages, all races and creeds. People from every state in the U.S. and many countries around world. Please cheer for yourselves, for you represent the change that this world wants and needs.

(a long loud cheer)

I have run a novel campaign and I have very seldom spoken out. Whatever we do in this campaign must have more than one purpose and this gathering is no exception.(pause)

You are standing on another solution. The land that was cleared for this rally will be the solution to the homeless crisis. It will be called “Angel City” and will eliminate “Skid Row” from the streets of L.A.

Once the solution is tested here, it will spread to cities throughout the United States and eventually around the world.

(long cheer)

I would like to get a bit personal for a moment. When I was a young man I was very naive, but I eventually fell into a routine that I felt comfortable with and that made my connections with other people very limited, at best.

Computers and other technologies made it easier and easier to limit my one on one, personal communications. I must admit I made a number of mistakes in my life.

(the audience listens intently)

When I got older I started to miss the companionship that others took for granted. I had a relationship with a much younger woman. I guess, like many others, I wanted to regain my youth, but more than that I wanted to have a family, a legacy, so that others would know that I existed, to leave something behind that would carry my story forward.(pause)

As you might guess, the relationship did not work out, but it taught me something, it taught me to be independent. You have to be independent and secure before you can reach out to others, work with them and learn how to be interdependent…to work together, to accomplish great things.(pause)

I just learned today, that the two candidates representing the major political parties have accepted my challenge and from this point forward will be using their campaign donations to solve problems and their coffers are much bigger than mine.

This makes me very happy.(another roar from the crowd)

Something else makes me even more happy and secure. I finally have found my family…(pause)

You…you are my family. And I know, even if I do not win this election…

(The crowd begins to Chant: Write-In…Patrick Lee…Write-In Patrick Lee…Patrick Lee…Patrick Lee…Right into the White House…Patrick Lee right into the White House…Write-In…Write-In…Write-In…)

PATRICK (CONT’D)

Even if I don’t win this election, I know that you will carry on my ideas. My plans will move forward, in the United States and around the world. You…you are my legacy.

Even after I am gone and only a memory, You…You will carry on…

(An even louder roar from the crowd. And they begin to Chant: “We The People…Love Lee” “We The People…Love Lee” “Love Lee…Love Lee”…)

WE SEE tears in Patrick’s eyes, and they begin to roll down his cheeks as the huge audience continues to roar in response.

(And the roar dissolves into a Third Chant: “Patrick Lee…Lee’d The Way…Patrick Lee…Lee’d The Way” and WE SEE the audience is exercising their vote by wearing Purple and stretching out elastic exercise bands that read “Lee’d The Way” in Large Purple letters.)

(The chant continues as the Camera rises above the crowd to reveal how large it is…and the chant continues in the background…”Lee’d The Way…Lee’d The Way.”)

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S BEAT SHEET DRAFT 2

What I learned doing this assignment is that adding the Theme and the Antagonists to the Beat Sheet adds another dimension to the storyline.

ACT 1:

The Opening:

EXT. OUTDOOR ARENA – L.A. – NIGHT

TE 1: Candidate Lee gives his first major Speech to a huge, adoring audience in Los Angeles, California. Celeste his Vice Presidential Running Mate is proud to realize she has made Patrick Lee an effective public speaker. She has bolstered his confidence by telling him that she believes in him and she can wait 8 years to be President of the U.S.

INT. CITY HALL – L.A. – DAY

Patrick and Celeste are discussing with Los Angeles City Officials their plans to eliminate Skid Row from the City and transport all the homeless to Angel City, a new planned community within the City of L.A.

Inciting Incident:

EXT. EMPTY LOT – L.A. – DAY

We realize that Patrick is not joking, he is intent on solving problems while he is running for office, he is not waiting to occupy the White House before putting his ideas into action. We realize with his challenges of being legally blind and autistic, he would not be able to accomplish these amazing tasks without the help of the charismatic aura and political savvy of Celeste.

They break ground on Angel City, which, to the amazement of L.A. Officials, is completed in 7 days.

PLACEHOLDER: This can be a Montage of Scenes to emphasize the speed of the manufacture of the city.

PLACEHOLDER: The Democratic and Republican Nominees react to this unbelievable miracle performed in a week’s time by the Solution Candidate. They attact his naivete and the fact that he is more involved with his own nation of Oberoende, the micro-nation that he is already President of. That his loyalty would be divided between Oberoende and the U.S., with the U.S. coming in 2nd.

Turning Point:

EXT. ANGEL CITY – ONE WEEK LATER – DAY

Seco BrightCloud is arrested on the spot while working in Angel City.

ACT 2:

New Plan:

INT. OBEROENDE – PATRICK’S CAMPAIGN HEADQUARTERS – 2ND FLOOR – L.A. – DAY

We are in a Live & Work condo that Patrick has decorated like another country. It is more than his castle, it is his nation, a nation within a nation. From within this micro-nation he plans to change the U.S. They are meeting to discuss “why” Seco has been arrested and how they can get him out of jail.

INT. L.A. JAIL – DAY

TE 2: After trying to get Seco out of jail, Patrick and Celeste decide to visit a mental patient in a local asylum.

INT. MENTAL INSTITUTION – L.A. – DAY

TE 3: Patrick with the help of Celeste interviews the mental patient about Seco’s arrest and finds out how the other candidates are effectively targeting and attacking his campaign.

INT. LOCAL NEWS ROOM – L.A. – NIGHT

The Newcaster explains that apparently the mental patient had been talked into and perhaps even bribed to give testimony to implicate Seco and Patrick’s campaign team in a planned assassination attempt.

EXT. JAIL – L.A. – DAY

As the mental patient has retracted his claims against Seco, he is released from jail and is welcomed by other members of the campaign team.

PLACEHOLDER: Angel City has turning out to be very successful in alleviating L.A.’s homeless problem. So much so that…

PLACEHOLDER: The State of California contacts Patrick Lee to develop a plan for a “Border City” to possibly help California’s border problem.

Plan In Action:

EXT. BORDER CITY – U.S./MEXICAN BORDER – SOUTHERN CALIF. – DAY

Again construction goes on at California’s Southern border and through a series of Montages “Border City” becomes a reality.

INT. OBEROENDE – PATRICK’S CAMPAIGN OFFICE – L.A. – DAY

Celeste is training Patrick for an upcoming Presidential Debate. She emphasizing how they will attack him and he is practicing how he will deflect their attacks.

INT. DEBATE STAGE – UNDETERMINED CITY – NIGHT

Patrick manages to get through the debate without having any kind of direct confrontation with the two major party candidates. He plays a game of verbal Aikido throwing them off guard as he makes positive statements that emphasize solutions. He challenges them to implement solutions to problems using their campaign donations, as he is doing.

Midpoint Turning Point:

INT. DEBATE – BACKSTAGE – NIGHT

After the Debate Patrick is backstage trying to field questions from the press with the help of Celeste when he is arrested for income tax evasion.

ACT 3

PLACEHOLDER: Celeste finds out that Patrick’s old girlfriend, Barb, has turned him in to the IRS for possible income tax violations in the past preparation of his clients taxes, when he was a CPA.

TE 4:

PLACEHOLDER: Celeste tracks down Barb and confronts her with her allegations. Barb is intractable and accuses Celeste of using Patrick for her own political goals. This hurts Celeste to the bone.

New Plan:

INT. FEDERAL DETENTION CENTER – DAY

Celeste visits Patrick, who is behind bars and extremely depressed. Celeste tells him who turned him in and Patrick admits that he still loves Barb and she wants revenge against him, but he didn’t do anything wrong. Still, he feels it is impossible to campaign while behind bars and Celeste tells him not to worry, the campaign will continue, and he will “win.”

Turning Point:

PLACEHOLDER: The major Candidates are really taking advantage of Patrick’s legal situation. They are saying with these legal problems he should immediately suspend his campaign.

Act 4:

TE 5:

PLACEHOLDER: Montage of Celeste on the Campaign Trail, making unbelievably powerful and moving speeches to audiences both on multi-media and in person. She is obviously keeping Patrick’s followers believing he still can win and are ready to write in Patrick Lee and Celeste SeedlingSun when they go to the polls.

PLACEHOLDER:

Patrick goes over the figures with the IRS and it is proven that everything he did in his income tax preparation was within the law.

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:

PLACEHOLDER:

The Presidential election takes place and all the news networks are covering it. It is a nail-biter and when the counting is finally over Patrick Lee and Celeste have won the popular vote and Patrick has a huge advantage in the Electoral College, but not a majority.

PLACEHOLDER:

The Republican and Democratic Candidates still feel they have a chance as the Electoral College has thrown the election decision into the Congress, which is, for the most part, Democrats and Republicans. There is no Solution Party.

INT. HOUSE OF REPRESENTATIVES – DAY/NIGHT (MONTAGE)

The House must vote for President and after a lot of infighting, there is finally a vote, which ends in a deadlock.

INT. U.S. SENATE – NIGHT

The Democratic Senate must decide Vice President. Celeste SeedlingSun amazingly wins the Vice Presidency on the first ballot by one vote.

PLACEHOLDER:

MONTAGE: The house over the next two month has several more votes, but still no candidate has a majority.

Resolution:

EXT. INAUGURAL STAGE – WASHINGTON D.C. – DAY

TE 6:

On Inauguration Day, there is still no clear winner in the House Vote for President, so Celeste SeedlingSun takes the Presidential Oath of Office, and makes an inspired Inaugural Speech as the First Native American President of the U.S.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S HIGH SPEED BEAT SHEET

What I learned doing this assignment is that it was a real bear. Something I don’t like doing, but it helps in putting a temporary structure to the story, obviously to be changed latter.

EXT. OUTDOOR ARENA – L.A. – NIGHT

TE 1: Candidate Lee gives his first major Speech to a huge, adoring audience in Los Angeles, California. Celeste realizes she has made Patrick an effective public speaker.

INT. CITY HALL – L.A. – DAY

Patrick and Celeste are discussing with Los Angeles City Officials their plans to eliminate Skid Row from the City and transport all the homeless to Angel City, a new planned community within the City of L.A.

Inciting Incident:

EXT. EMPTY LOT – L.A. – DAY

They break ground on Angel City, which, to the amazement of L.A. Officials, is completed in 7 days.

PLACEHOLDER: This can be a Montage of Scenes to emphasize the speed of the manufacture of the city.

PLACEHOLDER: The Democratic and Republican Nominees react to this unbelievable miracle performed in a week’s time by the Solution Candidate.

Turning Point:

EXT. ANGEL CITY – ONE WEEK LATER – DAY

Seco BrightCloud is arrested on the spot while working in Angel City.

ACT 2:

New Plan:

INT. L.A. JAIL – DAY

TE 2: After trying to get Seco out of jail, Patrick and Celeste decide to visit a mental patient in a local asylum.

INT. MENTAL INSTITUTION – L.A. – DAY

TE 3: Patrick with the help of Celeste interviews the mental patient about Seco’s arrest and finds out how the other candidates are effectively targeting and attacking his campaign.

INT. LOCAL NEWS ROOM – L.A. – NIGHT

The Newscaster explains that apparently the mental patient had been talked into and perhaps even bribed to give testimony to implicate Seco and Patrick’s campaign team in the planned assassination attempt.

EXT. JAIL – L.A. – DAY

As the mental patient has retracted his claims against Seco, he is released from jail and is welcomed by other members of the campaign team.

PLACEHOLDER: Angel City is turning out to be very successful in alleviating L.A.’s homeless problem.

PLACEHOLDER: The State of California contacts Patrick Lee to develop a plan for a “Border City” to possibly help California’s border problem.

Plan In Action:

EXT. BORDER CITY – U.S./MEXICAN BORDER – SOUTHERN CALIF. – DAY

Again construction goes on at California’s Southern border and through a series of Montages “Border City” becomes a reality.

INT. PATRICK’S CAMPAIGN OFFICES – L.A. – DAY

Celeste is training Patrick for an upcoming Presidential Debate.

INT. DEBATE STAGE – UNDETERMINED CITY – NIGHT

Patrick manages to get through the debate without having any kind of direct confrontation with the two major party candidates. He plays a game of verbal Aikido throwing them off guard as he makes positive statements that emphasize solutions.

Midpoint Turning Point:

INT. DEBATE – BACKSTAGE – NIGHT

After the Debate Patrick is backstage trying to field questions from the press with the help of Celeste when he is arrested for income tax evasion.

ACT 3

PLACEHOLDER: Celeste finds out that Patrick’s old girlfriend, Barb, has turned him in to the IRS for possible income tax violations in the past preparation of his clients taxes, when he was a CPA.

TE 4:

PLACEHOLDER: Celeste tracks down Barb and confronts her with her allegations. Barb is intractable and accuses Celeste of using Patrick for her own political goals. This hurts Celeste to the bone.

New Plan:

INT. FEDERAL DETENTION CENTER – DAY

Celeste visits Patrick, who is behind bars and extremely depressed. Celeste tells him who turned him in and Patrick admits that he still loves Barb, but she wants revenge against him. He reiterates that he didn’t do anything wrong. Still, he feels like it is impossible to campaign while behind bars. Celeste tells him not to worry the campaign will continue and he will “win.”

Turning Point:

PLACEHOLDER: The major Candidates are really taking advantage of Patrick’s legal situation.

Act 4:

TE 5:

PLACEHOLDER: Montage of Celeste on the Campaign Trail, making unbelievably powerful and moving speeches to audiences both on multi-media and in person. She is obviously keeping Patrick’s followers believing in him and ready to write in Patrick Lee and Celeste SeedlingSun when they go to the polls.

PLACEHOLDER:

Patrick goes over the figures with the IRS and it is proven that everything he did in his income tax preparation was within the law.

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:

PLACEHOLDER:

The Presidential election takes place and all the news networks are covering it. It is a nail-biter and when the counting is finally over Patrick Lee and Celeste have won the popular vote and Patrick has a huge advantage in the Electoral College, but not a majority.

INT. HOUSE OF REPRESENTATIVES – DAY/NIGHT (MONTAGE)

The House must vote for President and after a lot of infighting, there is finally a vote, which ends in a deadlock.

INT. U.S. SENATE – NIGHT

The Democratic Senate must decide Vice President. Celeste SeedlingSun wins the Vice Presidency on the first ballot by one vote.

PLACEHOLDER:

MONTAGE: The House over the next two months has several votes, but still no candidate has a majority.

Resolution:

EXT. INAUGURAL STAGE – WASHINGTON D.C. – DAY

TE 6:

On Inauguration Day, there is still no clear winner in the House Vote for President, so Celeste SeedlingSun takes the Presidential Oath of Office, and makes an inspired Inaugural Speech as the First Native American President of the U.S.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S TRANSFORMATIONAL EVENTS (Lesson 6)

What I learned doing this assignment is that it is very repetitive. Going through the same points again and again and again. Hopefully learning something and adding to it each time.

For most part I see this process as very difficult. You cannot make changes once you post and before posting it is extremely difficult to work on this “reply” platform. Not very well thought out.

Start with the Character Arc and the list of Old Ways and New Ways.

CELESTE’S CHARACTER ARC:

Celeste starts from a person with a mission of her own that takes a back seat to Patrick’s mission. She is willing to wait 8 years to realize her personal goals.

At the end of the film she realizes that she has reached her personal goal even sooner than she ever dreamed by helping Patrick on his personal journey.

OLD WAYS

1) Celeste must train Patrick to speak effectively.

2) Celeste must train Patrick to debate the big boys.

3) Celeste must make Patrick presentable to the public.

4) Celeste must train Patrick to overcome his challenges.

NEW WAYS

1) Celeste must put her goals and ambitions on the back burner to help Patrick succeed.

2) Celeste must incorporate Patrick’s unusual ideas into her mindset and help him implement them.

3) Celeste must accept the fact that she has feelings for Patrick.

4) She must accept that she has, by helping Patrick, realized her ambition.

Make a list of 6 – 8 changes or steps that need to happen for that character to go from who they are in the beginning (Old Ways) to who they are in the ending (New Ways).

1) Celeste must put her ambitions aside to teach Patrick to be able to speak effectively to a large audience. Part of the old ways of politics.

2) Celeste must help Patrick to implement a major solution to the Homeless Crisis in L.A. to keep the momentum of his campaign moving forward.

3) Celeste must help Patrick deal with the upheaval and possible damage that Barb, his former fiance has caused to his campaign. He is being investigated for possible income tax evasion.

4) Celeste must help find out why Seco is arrested and the campaign team is being accused of having plotted an assassination attempt.

5) Celeste must organize the write-in campaign as Patrick is not on the ballot on any state in the union.

6) Celeste must deal with the fact that Patrick has fallen in love with her.

7) Celeste is happy for Patrick when he finally wins both the popular vote and the electoral college vote.

8) As Patrick has won a plurality, but not a majority, of the electoral college, the vote for President and Vice President goes to the Congress. The Senate elects Celeste as the Vice President, but the House is deadlocked. When Inauguration Day comes, Celeste is sworn in as the President of the U.S. and makes an endearing speech as the first Native American President.

Sequence the steps from easiest to most difficult. This will imply the journey the character takes.

1) Celeste has trained Patrick in the old ways, to be an effective public speaker.

2) She has put off her ambition to be President, at least for the present, to help Patrick solve problems.

3) Celeste must deal with the fact that she really cares for Patrick.

4) She realizes that she can teach him to debate (the old way), but if he uses his new ways he will be even more effective.

5) She is happy with her work with Patrick when he wins the popular vote.

6) She realizes the old ways have made her President of the U.S., but the new ways she had learned from Patrick are the way she will run the country.

Add these transformational events to your four act structure.

Act 1:

Opening :

Candidate Lee gives his first major Speech to a huge, adoring audience in Los Angeles, California.

NEXT scene:

Patrick and Celeste are discussing with Los Angeles City Officials their plans to eliminate Skid Row from the City and transport all the homeless to Angel City, a new planned community within the City of L.A.

Inciting Incident

They break ground on Angel City, which to the amazement of L.A. Officials, is completed in 7 days. This brings an almost instantaneous reaction from his opposition and his trusted campaign worker Seco is arrested on the spot.

Turning Point:

After trying to get Seco out of jail, Patrick visits a mental patient in a local asylum who may have lead to the arrest of Seco and learns how his campaign is effectively being attacked.

Act 2:

New plan:

Patrick must prove that the mental patient was talked into giving false testimony against Seco and that this was somehow arranged by his opponents.

Plan in action:

The mental patient retracts his claims against Seco and he is released from jail.

Midpoint Turning Point:

Patrick finds out that his old girlfriend, Barb, has turned him in to the IRS for possible income tax violations in the past preparation of his clients taxes, when he was a CPA.

Act 3:

Rethink everything:

Celeste helps Patrick prepare for the next Presidential Debate and tries to convince him that everything will be okay.

New Plan:

Patrick manages to get through the debate without having any kind of direct confrontation with the two major party candidates. He plays a game of verbal Aikido throwing them off guard as he makes positive statements that emphasize solutions.

Turning Point:

After winning the Debate he is arrested back stage for income tax evasion.

Act 4:

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:

Patrick goes over the figures with the IRS and proves everything he did is within the law. The Presidential Campaign takes place and even though Patrick Lee is not on the ballot and voters must write in his name, he wins the Popular Vote and the Electoral College Vote.

Unfortunately, he does not have a majority of the Electoral College, so the Republican House and the Democratic Senate must decide the President and Vice President. It is a tie in the House Vote for President, but Celeste SeedlingSun wins the Vice Presidency in the Senate by one vote.

Resolution:

By Inauguration Day, there is still no clear winner in the House Vote for President, so Celeste SeedlingSun takes the Presidential Oath of Office, and makes an inspired Inaugural Speech as the First Native American President of the U.S.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

2) Celeste must train Patrick to debate the big boys.EUGENE’S TRANSFORMATIONAL EVENTS (Lesson 6)

What I learned doing this assignment is that it is very repetative. Going through the same points again and again and again. Hopefully learning something and added to it each time.

Start with the Character Arc and the list of Old Ways and New Ways.

CELESTE’S CHARACTER ARC:

Celeste starts from a person with a mission of his own that has takes a back seat to Patrick’s mission. She is willing to wait 8 years to realize her personal goals.

At the end of the film she realizes that she has reached her personal goal even sooner than she ever dreamed by helping Patrick on his personal journey.

OLD WAYS

1) Celeste must train Patrick to speak effectively.

3) Celeste must make Patrick presentable to the public.

4) Celeste must train Patrick to overcome his challenges.

NEW WAYS

1) Celeste must put her goals and ambitions on the back burner to help Patrick succeed.

2) Celeste must incorporate Patrick’s unsual ideas into her mindset and help him implement them.

3) Celeste must accept the fact that she has feelings for Patrick.

4) She must accept that she has, by helping Patrick, realized her ambition.

Make a list of 6 – 8 changes or steps that need to happen for that character to go from who they are in the beginning (Old Ways) to who they are in the ending (New Ways).

1) Celeste must put her ambitions aside to teach Patrick to be able to speak effectively to a large audience. Part of the old ways of politics.

2) Celeste must help Patrick to implement a major solution in California to the Homeless Crisis in L.A. to keep the momentum of his campaign moving forward.

3) Celeste must help Patrick deal with the upheavel and possible damage that Barb, his former fiance has caused to his campaign. He is being investigated for possible income tax evasion.

4) Celeste must help find out why Seco is arrested and the campaign team is being accused of have plotted an assassination attempt.

5) Celeste must organize the write-in campaign as Patrick is not on the ballot on any state in the union.

6) Celeste must deal with the fact that Patrick has fallen in love with her.

7) Celeste is happy for Patrick when he finally wins both the popular vote and the electoral college vote.

8) As Patrick has won a plurality, but not a majority, of the electoral college, the vote for President and Vice President goes to the Congress. The Senate elects Celeste as the Vice President, but the House is deadlocked. When Inaugaration day comes, Celeste is sworn in as the President of the U.S. and makes an endearing speech as the first Native American President.

Sequence the steps from easiest to most difficult. This will imply the journey the character takes.

1) Celeste has trained Patrick in the old ways, to be an effective public speaker.

2) She has put off her ambition to be President, at least for present, to help Patrick solve problems.

3) Celeste must deal with the fact that she really cares for Patrick.

4) She realizes that he can teach him to debate (the old way), but if he uses his new ways he will be even more effective.

5) She is happy with her work with Patrick when he wins the popular vote.

6) She realizes the old ways have made her President of the U.S., but the new ways she had learned from Patrick are the way she will run the country.

Add these transformational events to your four act structure.

Act 1:

Opening :

Candidate Lee gives his first major Speech to a huge, adoring audience in Los Angeles, California.

NEXT scene:

Patrick and Celeste are discussing with Los Angeles City Officials their plans to eliminate Skid Row from the City and transport all the homeless to Angel City, a new planned community within the City of L.A.

Inciting Incident

They break ground on Angel City, which to the amazement of L.A. Officials, is completed in 7 days. This brings an almost instantaneous reaction from his opposition and his trusted campaign worker Seco is arrested on the spot.

Turning Point:

After trying to get Seco out of jail, Patrick visits a mental patient in a local asylum who may have lead to the arrest of Seco and learns how his campaign is effectively being attacked.

Act 2:

New plan:

Patrick must prove that the mental patient was talked into giving false testimony against Seco and that this was somehow arranged by his opponents.

Plan in action:

The mental patient retracts his claims against Seco and he is released from jail.

Midpoint Turning Point:

Patrick finds out that his old girlfriend, Barb, has turned him in to the IRS for possible income tax violations in the past preparation of his clients taxes, when he was a CPA.

Act 3:

Rethink everything:

Celeste helps Patrick prepare for the next Presidential Debate and tries to convince him that everything will be okay.

New Plan:

Patrick manages to get through the debate without having any kind of direct confrontation with the two major party candidates. He plays a game of verbal Aikido throwing them off guard as he makes positive statements that emphasize solutions.

Turning Point:

After winning the Debate he is arrested back stage for income tax evasion.

Act 4:

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:

Patrick goes over the figures with the IRS and proves everything he did is within the law. The Presidential Campaign takes place and even though Patrick Lee is not on the ballot and voters must write in his name, he wins the Popular Vote and the Electoral College Vote.

Unfortunately, he does not have a majority of the Electoral College, so the Republican House and the Democratic Senate must decide the President and Vice President. It is a tie in the House Vote for President, but Celeste SeedlingSun wins the Vice Presidency in the Senate Vote.

Resolution:

By Inauguration Day, there is still no clear winner in the House Vote for President, so Celeste SeedlingSun takes the Presidential Oath of Office, and makes an inspired Inaugural Speech as the First Native American President of the U.S.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S FIRST DRAFT (LESSON 5)

What I learned doing this assignment is if it wasn’t for others in the class I would not find out what the assignment was. I guess this is the right one, but I see 2 others sites with assignment 5 in them.

Create a first draft of your 4 Act Transformational Structure.

1. Give us the following:

Concept:

Patrick Lee, the first Solution Candidate for President of the U.S. finally has taken the lead in the national polls and the Major Political Parties and the Government try to sabotage his campaign. Ignoring them and with the help of his running mate, Celeste SeedlingSun he continues to solve problems converting even more of the public to his campaign.

Main Conflict:

Patrick Lee has fallen in love with his Vice Presidental running mate, Celeste SeedlingSun and she must quell his advances at the same time as she prepares him to challenge the competition.

Old Ways:

The Old Politics of Parties and Promises. Of kissing babies and shaking hands. Of traveling around country on the tax payers dollar.

New Ways:

The Solution Candidates solve the problems facing the people, while they are running for office, and challenge others running for the White House to do the same.

2. Fill in each of these with the answers you have right now.

Act 1:

Opening :

Candidate Lee gives his first major Speech to a huge, adoring audience in Los Angeles, California.

NEXT scene:

Patrick and Celeste are discussing with Los Angeles City Officials their plans to eliminate Skid Row from the City and transport all the homeless to Angel City, a new planned community within the City of L.A.

Inciting Incident

They break ground on Angel City, which to the amazement of L.A. Officials, is completed in 7 days. This brings an almost instantaneous reaction from his opposition and his trusted campaign worker Seco is arrested on the spot.

Turning Point:

After trying to get Seco out of jail, Patrick visits a mental patient in a local asylum who may have lead to the arrest of Seco and learns how his campaign is effectively being attacked.

Act 2:

New plan:

Patrick must prove that the mental patient was talked into giving false testimony against Seco and that this was somehow arranged by his opponents.

Plan in action:

The mental patient retracts his claims against Seco and he is released from jail.

Midpoint Turning Point:

Patrick finds out that his old girlfriend, Barb, has turned him in to the IRS for possible income tax violations in the past preparation of his clients taxes, when he was a CPA.

Act 3:

Rethink everything:

Celeste helps Patrick prepare for the next Presidential Debate and tries to convince him that everything will be okay.

New Plan:

Patrick manages to get through the debate without having any kind of direct confrontation with the two major party candidates. He plays a game of verbal Aikido throwing them off guard as he makes positive statements that emphasize solutions.

Turning Point:

After winning the Debate he is arrested back stage for income tax evasion.

Act 4:

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:

Patrick goes over the figures with the IRS and proves everything he did is within the law. The Presidential Campaign takes place and even though Patrick Lee is not on the ballot and voters must write in his name, he wins the Popular Vote and the Electoral College Vote.

Unfortunately, he does not have a majority of the Electoral College, so the Republican House and the Democratic Senate must decide the President and Vice President. It is a tie in the House Vote for President, but Celeste SeedlingSun wins the Vice Presidency in the Senate Vote.

Resolution:

By Inauguration Day, there is still no clear winner in the House Vote for President, so Celeste SeedlingSun takes the Presidential Oath of Office, and makes an inspired Inaugural Speech as the First Native American President of the U.S.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S FIRST DRAFT (LESSON 5)

What I learned doing this assignment is if it wasn’t for others in the class I would not find out what the assignment was.

Create a first draft of your 4 Act Transformational Structure.

1. Give us the following:

Concept:

Patrick Lee, the first Solution Candidate for President of the U.S. finally has taken the lead in the national polls and the Major Political Parties and the Government try to sabotage his campaign. Ignoring them and with the help of his running mate, Celeste SeedlingSun he continues to solve problems converting even more of the public to his campaign.

Main Conflict:

Patrick Lee has fallen in love with his Vice Presidental running mate, Celeste SeedlingSun and she must quell his advances at the same time as she prepares him to challenge the competition.

Old Ways:

The Old Politics of Parties and Promises. Of kissing babies and shaking hands. Of traveling around country on the tax payers dollar.

New Ways:

The Solution Candidates solve the problems facing the people, while they are running for office, and challenge others running for the White House to do the same.

2. Fill in each of these with the answers you have right now.

Act 1:

Opening :

Candidate Lee gives his first major Speech to a huge, adoring audience in Los Angeles, California.

NEXT scene:

Patrick and Celeste are discussing with Los Angeles City Officials their plans to eliminate Skid Row from the City and transport all the homeless to Angel City, a new planned community within the City of L.A.

Inciting Incident

They break ground on Angel City, which to the amazement of L.A. Officials, is completed in 7 days. This brings an almost instantaneous reaction from his opposition and his trusted campaign worker Seco is arrested on the spot.

Turning Point:

After trying to get Seco out of jail, Patrick visits a mental patient in a local asylum who may have lead to the arrest of Seco and learns how his campaign is effectively being attacked.

Act 2:

New plan:

Patrick must prove that the mental patient was talked into giving false testimony against Seco and that this was somehow arranged by his opponents.

Plan in action:

The mental patient retracts his claims against Seco and he is released from jail.

Midpoint Turning Point:

Patrick finds out that his old girlfriend, Barb, has turned him in to the IRS for possible income tax violations in the past preparation of his clients taxes, when he was a CPA.

Act 3:

Rethink everything:

Celeste helps Patrick prepare for the next Presidential Debate and tries to convince him that everything will be okay.

New Plan:

Patrick manages to get through the debate without having any kind of direct confrontation with the two major party candidates. He plays a game of verbal Aikido throwing them off guard as he makes positive statements that emphasize solutions.

Turning Point:

After winning the Debate he is arrested back stage for income tax evasion.

Act 4:

Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:

Patrick goes over the figures with the IRS and proves everything he did is within the law. The Presidential Campaign takes place and even though Patrick Lee is not on the ballot and voters must write in his name, he wins the Popular Vote and the Electoral College Vote.

Unfortunately, he does not have a majority of the Electoral College, so the Republican House and the Democratic Senate must decide the President and Vice President. It is a tie in the House Vote for President, but Celeste SeedlingSun wins the Vice Presidency in the Senate Vote.

Resolution:

By Inauguration Day, there is still no clear winner in the House Vote for President, so Celeste SeedlingSun takes the Presidential Oath of Office, and makes an inspired Inaugural Speech as the First Native American President of the U.S.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

1. Name?

Eugene Mandelcorn: I believe I am the only person in the world with that name.

2. How many scripts you’ve written?

About 12 features and numerous other types of scripts.

3. What you hope to get out of the class?

Turn out more scripts in less time.

4. Something unique, special, strange or unusual about you?

As a young man I came a fraction of the second from death. I changed from a person who was care free and did not know what I wanted to do with my life to someone with purpose. I decided I wanted to change the world for the better and that my vehicle would be the entertainment industry. I wrote a screenplay, and another and another. What I didn’t realize at first was that I was writing in a new genre, one that didn’t exist.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S CHARACTER INTERVIEWS

What I learned doing this assignment is that I never received this assignment so I had to go to other’s posts to be able to put the whole thing together. Don’t have time to complain, just thank those who did receive the lesson, and who showed me what to do.

QUESTIONS FOR YOUR PROTAGONIST

Tell me about yourself.

Well, you know a lot about me already, after all, I’m running for Vice President of the United States. I’m a proud Native American Woman who grew-up on the Cherokee Reservation in Oklahoma. I could of been the Chief of Cherokee Nation, but I left Oklahoma in the middle of the campaign to come here to California to help Patrick Lee with his campaign.

Why do you think you were called to this journey? Why you?

I always looked up to Wilma Mankiller. She was the first woman chief of the Cherokee Nation, but I had the vision that I could do even more with my life to help my people. I was born to do great things, and I had to follow my vision.

You know what you are up against . What is it about your running mate that makes this journey even more difficult for you?

Patrick has a lot of baggage. Of course, his being legally blind and autistic, makes it hard for him to communicate with people, to get his ideas across. He has great ideas, he always thinks outside the box. In fact, so far outside the box, and he forgets where the box is and what was in it. I am able to help to keep him grounded and put his ideas into action.

In order to accomplish what you want, you are going to have to step way outside of your box. What changes do you expect to make and which of them will be the most difficult?

I will have to teach Patrick how to debate the other candidates and come out on top. I have to anticipate what they will throw at him and how he can get in his talking points, his ideas, without being affected by their barbs. I have to get into Patrick’s head and make him react in a way that doesn’t make him seem challenged, but gives him the upper hand, giving the feeling that he can handle any situation.

What habits or ways of thinking do you think will be the most difficult to let go of?

That fact that I will not be able to run for President for another 8 years. You see, I am sure that I can put Patrick Lee in the White House, not for one term, but two. I have to put his success at the forefront of my mind and put my ambitions in check.

What fears, insecurities and wounds have held you back?

Losing my parents when I was young really hurt. If it wasn’t for the fact that I became a child of the tribe, I wouldn’t be here today. I felt the same weakness and uncontrollable sorrow and pain when we almost lost Patrick. But when he came back, it resurrected my faith that he was destined to be President of the U.S.

What skills, background or expertise makes you well-suited to face this conflict or antagonist?

As I told you I was trained to lead the Cherokee Nation, I had a great mentor in Samuel BrightCloud and I know, with my help, Patrick Lee will be able to lead this nation.

What are you hiding from the other characters? What don’t you want them to know?

I more than believe in Patrick, that’s enough said. He means a lot to me.

Tell me your side of this whole conflict / story.

I think that the opposition is pretending to make changes in their campaigns. And they are only doing this because they think it is the only way to beat Patrick. And to tell you the truth , their right, but I think we will convince the people that they are still playing the political game and that Patrick and I refuse to play that game.

What does it do for your life if you succeed here?

Patrick will be President and after 8 years I will follow in his footsteps.

QUESTIONS FOR YOUR ANTAGONIST

Tell me about yourself.

My name is Patrick Lee. I am Asian American. I am legally blind and autistic. The perfect candidate for President of the United States.

Having to do with this journey, what are your strengths and weaknesses?

My strength is that I am blind and autistic, so I can shut out the world around me to be able to concentrate on solving the problems of the world. I guess my main weakness is I often feel dependent on others and I easily fall in love, which can lead to disaster.

Or for a relationship movie, why are you committed to making them change?

To change anything or anyone, you must change them from within. I have learned that in my home, in my nation of Oberoende, my micro-nation, a nation within a nation.

What do you get out of winning this fight / succeeding in your plan / taking down your competition?

I will change the U.S. political system and eventually the world.

What drives you toward your mission / agenda, even in the face of danger, ruin, or death?

My purpose in life is to change the world and with Celeste by my side I cannot fail.

What secrets must you keep to succeed? What other secrets do you keep out of fear / insecurity?

I still love Barb, my former companion, but she is not good for me. Celeste is fantastic, but I do not think she feels that kind of love for me.

Compared to other people like you, what makes you special?

Besides being blind and autistic, I am also a mathematical genius. That also allows me to find solutions to many problems that escape most people.

What do you think of Celeste?

Like I said before I think she is fantastic and I am so lucky that she is helping me, but I don’t think feels, in the same way, about me

Tell me your side of this whole conflict / story.

I want to change the world and without Celeste I was going nowhere. I am a lucky man and I know it. My competition in the political arena, as long as Celeste is by side, does not have a chance.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S CHARACTER PROFILE – PART 2

What I learned doing this assignment is that it helps to break down your characters to understand how they think and what makes them do the things they do.

CELESTE SEEDLINGSUN

What draws us to this character?

Celeste is the perfect catalyst for Patrick’s Presidential run. She gives him confidence and trains him to be a meaningful candidate.

Traits: Celeste is a Native American who is powerful, charismatic, controlling, manipulative, and convincing.

Subtext: Celeste has feelings for Patrick, but hides them, and won’t let them get in the way.

Flaw: She lost both of her parents when she was very young and learned to be independent, but has problems having an emotional relationship, fears of being dependent on others.

Values: Believes in her abilities, respects other strong women, believes she can accomplish anything.

Irony: She is willing to help Patrick become President of the U.S., even though that is actually her own ambition.

What makes this the right character for this role? She is a catalyst, she makes things happen, and Patrick needs her. Without her, he has no chance at the Presidency.

PATRICK LEE

What draws us to this character?

A real underdog that is realizing his potential with the help of a committed assistant.

Traits: Patrick Lee is Asian American, legally blind, autistic and a mathematical genius.

Subtext: Patrick is madly in love with Celeste. Fell for her when they first met, but has tried to put it on the back burner.

Flaw: His parents abandoned him when he was very young. They were not married and his autism was too much for them to handle. He wants to be close to someone. The only person that he was physically and emotionally involved with in his life, left him when he lost his sight. He wants to feel independent, but needs companionship.

Values: He believes in honesty, in going after your goals in life. His main purpose is to solve the problems of the world. He feels as President he can do that more easily.

Irony: He wants to be President of the U.S., but is already President of the Micro-Nation of Obereonde.

What makes this the right character for the role?

He is a triple underdog in his run for the U.S. Presidency and needs a helping hand and fortunately Celeste is there with all the know how and attributes that Patrick lacks.

• This reply was modified 4 years, 1 month ago by  Eugene Mandelcorn.
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[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S CHARACTER PROFILES – PART 1

What I learned from this assignment is that thinking more about each character helps to delineate their differences and similarities, making them well rounded and able to more easily interact with each other.

1. Listen to the 3 minute Empowerment Audio FIRST.

https://30dayscript.s3.amazonaws.com/Empowerment+Audio.m4a

2. Pick the type of role your Protagonist will play and give us a few sentences on how they will fulfill that role.

Hero… Celeste will train Patrick for the debates and how to be an effective speaker…

Explorer

Runner

Fighter

Victim

Dreamer… Celeste will point Patrick in the right direction when he needs support in implementing his ideas.

3. Pick the type of role your Antagonist will play and give us a few sentences on how they will fulfill that role.

Villain

Change Agent – Celeste is the change agent in the film, but Patrick is who she changes as she helps him implement his proposed changes in a concrete way.

Authority… The government and the other candidates try to stop the campaign, but the dynamic duo of Celeste and Patrick are more than they bargained for.

Predator

4. What other characters might be necessary?

Supporting characters: Samuel BrightCloud… Celeste’s mentor and elder of the tribe.

Seco BrightCloud… Samuel’s son, leader in the Native American Movement

Barb… Patrick’s former girlfriend

Minor roles: Ray… A mentally unstable man who tried to assassinate Patrick Lee.

The Republican and Democratic candidates for President.

The reigning President of the U.S.

Background characters: The campaign workers, crowds, etc.

5. Pick your genre.

If I was to pick one genre, it would definitely be “A Solution Film”

Rom-Com or Buddy Movie (This would be the closest listed genre as films it has similarities to would be: “Meet John Doe,” “My Fair Lady” and “Rain Man.”)

Thriller

Horror

Action

Drama

Sci-Fi

Comedy

6. Fill in whatever answers come to you about your lead character profiles.

Role in the story: Celeste is the catalyst that makes Patrick’s run for the Presidency possible.

Patrick falls in love with Celeste at first sight, he follows her directions like a puppy dog.

Age range and Description: Patrick is in his mid-30’s and Asian American.

Celeste is in her mid-40’s and Native American.

Internal Journey:

Celeste’s parents died when she was young and she was raised by the tribe. She wants to reach her potential and her dreams guide her. She is a Seer.

Patrick who grew up without his parents in a institution wants to feel loved and be independent.

External Journey:

Patrick wants to change the world for the better and feels he can accomplish it by being elected President of the United States.

Celeste must follow her visions to become President of the U.S.

Motivation:

Celeste sees herself as the first Native American President of the U.S.

Patrick wants to solve the problems of the U.S. and rest of the world.

Wound:

Celeste lost both her parents at a young age in a plane crash.

Patrick’s parents left. They could not deal with his autism. His girlfriend left him when he became blind.

Mission/Agenda:

Celeste must help Patrick to reach his goals in order to reach hers.

Patrick must change the U.S. political system and solve the problems people face every day.

Secret:

Celeste is starting to have feelings for Patrick.

Patrick feels ashamed that he has such strong feelings for Celeste.

What makes them special?

Celeste is a Seer, she must follow her vision.

Patrick thinks in a different way than the majority. He is a problem solver.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

EUGENE’S TRANFORMATIONAL JOURNEY

What I learned from this assignment is that I like the Old Lesson System much more and hope I can adapt to this New Lesson System.

1. Listen to the 3 minute Empowerment Audio FIRST.

https://30dayscript.s3.amazonaws.com/Empowerment+Audio.m4a

2. Who is your Hero and what is their Character Arc that represents a transformation?

Internal Journey: Celeste SeedlingSun must accept the fact that her visions may not fit, in a timely manner, with her present goals.

External Journey: Celeste must help Patrick Lee in his campaign for the Presidency.

3. What are the Old Ways and New Ways?

The Old Ways are the Present two Party System in the U.S. where others who run for President do not really have much of a chance.

The New Ways are Patrick Lee’s Campaign that breaks all the rules and gets the attention of the nation and the world. Celeste, originally his campaign manager, has become his Vice Presidential Running Mate.

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

Great advertisement for our SuccessMasters, Sandra!

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

Which ones?

[Eugene Mandelcorn]

Wow, I would love to learn another language to be able think in another way. It is interesting how easy it is for some and difficult for others.