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  • Brian Pearson

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    December 9, 2022 at 9:48 pm in reply to: Lesson 1

    Bus Stopped

    LogLine: Bus Operator must battle with Manson-cult type leader and followers on transit bus hijacked and stopped on Golden Gate Bridge.

    What Ive Learned: To narrow down the story and keep it simple yet effective.

    One Pager: On a high wind day Poppa, mid-fifties, bikes to transit garage in San Francisco. He gets ribbed from other’s from biking and going healthy.

    He drives empty bus across Golden Gate bridge with very high wind gusts. Starts north coming inbound to the city. Picks up people waiting along the route. Eventually picks up young group of kids and next stop older man with a hoodie.

    When mid-spanned on the bridge hooded man demands bus stop. He’s going to jump. Grabs wheel and Poppa must stop. Man opens the door and runs screaming crazy into traffic. All lanes stop as he climbs on to edge.

    A commuter detective onboard helps Poppa. But a young girl sneaks up from behind with a gun and cop surrenders. Hooded man comes back and takes gun from girl. Buck Naked, mid-thirties, with his group of kids take command.

    Buck demands 2 million or passengers die. Entire bridge shut down. Police helicopters and in the distance, media helicopters have hard time steadying from high winds. Snipers on hillside can’t get shot. Buck gets his money after shooting someone. Poor Honey, late teens, Buck’s girl, unzips large duffle bag she brought on board full of many drones. She and friends harass helicopters with drones bumping into windshields and one getting sucked into the engine of media copter that crashes into police copter and finally falls into police roadblock. Buck laughs with his motto, ‘chance favors the prepared mind.’

    Buck demands Poppa bust through fiery roadblock on south end of bridge. There’s mess and confusion. Poppa complies as Buck threatens his favorite lady passenger. Bus breaks through roadblock and flies through city streets. Up and down hills. In pursuit by police cars, motorcycles, helicopters.

    Police snipers on copters can’t get a fix, as bus eventually crashes into building lobby with row of bicycles. Buck rides away laughing ducking into narrow alleys. Poppa hot on his trail. With a long bike chase. Buck surprised Poppa can keep up. Eventually car door opens and Buck hits it, crashes. Poppa comes up and with one punch knocks him out.

    • This reply was modified 2 years, 7 months ago by  Brian Pearson.
  • Brian Pearson

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    December 9, 2022 at 12:58 am in reply to: Introduce Yourself To the Group

    Hi, how do I post the assignments and where? I have the logline and soon the one pager but where do I click on to post? Thanks, Brian.

  • Brian Pearson

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    December 6, 2022 at 7:52 pm in reply to: Introduce Yourself To the Group

    Brian Pearson

    Haven’t finished a script yet, still working on one. Have many story ideas. Could be in the wrong class yet liked the presentation so much and here I am.

    Hope to contribute and receive and exchanges with others. I don’t like writing alone. Love the back and forth of flowing ideas. Inspiration comes and it goes so when it’s there it’s heaven.

    Favorites are action/thriller but also love drama and comedy and faith based flicks too.

  • Brian Pearson

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    December 6, 2022 at 7:35 pm in reply to: Confidentiality Agreement

    Brian Pearson

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  • Brian Pearson

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    December 9, 2022 at 12:54 am in reply to: Introduce Yourself To the Group

    Thanks Michael, I’ll stick with it and we’ll see how turns out. My first class and with a screenwriter forum. Perhaps you’d like to partner up. If so let me know. Like I said I have ideas that I’m trying to put into screenplay format. And I have several and the one I’m using for the class I believe is high concept.

    Your logline has alot going on. Mystery and intrigued and commercial appeal. That’s important cause in the end we must attract interest from buyers.

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