[Brian Atkins]

Hi, Cheryl, I’m trying to find someone to do the feedback portion… Hal said go through module 4. 11 but I can’t seem to get in there is there another way.

[Brian Atkins]

Hi I’m Brian Atkins, I apologize if I’m Posting in the wrong thread I’m not used to this format but I’m trying to get better at it… I think this is where I post my assignments as well. I look forward to catching up so I can get an accountability partner during the speed writing part

<b jsname=”r4nke” tabindex=”-1″ data-thread-perm-id=”thread-a:r4788259137004899278″ data-legacy-thread-id=”189c70d0bc93997e” style=”font-family: inherit; font-size: inherit;”>Brian’s Character Intrigue.

I want to be known as a great writer, one who is able to create a moving compelling story that touches on the various social ills, as well as personal triumphs and tragedies I can use to uplift and encourage the masses.

I learned from this assignment that long gone is the day where characters are just one dimensional, also the more layers the more complex and interesting the character will be. And that is what gets actors foaming at the bit to play.

Character Name: JAMES BENNETT

Role: Protagonist

Hidden Agendas: NONE

Competition: Himself

Conspiracies: NONE

Secrets: Bennett murdered the man who molested his future wife.

Deception: He has moments of being evasive to make sure his secret stays hidden.

Unspoken Word: It (the murder) paralyzes him from the standpoint that he had a religious background and he has internal conflict knowing what he’s done.

Secret Identity: NONE

In the film Bennett’s subtext will show up in his standoffish demeanor where he holds people at bay not really letting people get too close to him. The flip side of that is that he really longs to let people in.

Character Name: Elimane

Role: Antagonist

Hidden Agendas: He will have several hidden agendas starting with a plan to gain control over the Assembly of the Undead by causing division amongst the vampires.

Competition: Sigmund at the beginning is short lived but there will be some more with perhaps Hans.

Conspiracies: Yes, everything about Eli is to gain control over the assembly and put the African vampires in control of the assembly.

Secrets: Ironically he has none well except for enacting his revenge on his master the witch but that’s to be expected.

Deception: He will deceive many just to get his end result.

Unspoken Word: tie in with his revenge on the witch again

Secret Identity: He has none since all the ghouls know he is the accursed Impundulu.

Character: Silas

Role: Vietnam vet turned Vampire hunter

Hidden Agendas: At this stage in his life he just wants to lay low after destroying Elimane’s brood during his vampire hunting days.

Competition: When he was in his prime he had none

Conspiracies: NONE

SECRETS: He has a few, he destroyed Eli’s brood and was involved in a sexual relationship with the witch. Oh yeah and the kicker is he knows Bennet’s secret.

Deception: Silas wasn’t so noble in his younger days his good deeds came at a price.

Unspoken Word: he’s a very mysterious man

Secret Identity: None

[Brian Atkins]

ok thanks so much im gonna keep on working on this format until i get it..

[Brian Atkins]

<b jsname=”r4nke” tabindex=”-1″ data-thread-perm-id=”thread-a:r6548362905826556394″ data-legacy-thread-id=”1898ea437dc0ab78″>Brian’s Genre Conventions

I want to be known as a great writer, one who is able to create a moving, compelling story that touches on the various ills, as well as the triumphs and tragedies that are indicative of the human condition.

Title: Bennett and the Impundulu

Concept: A homicide detective gets caught up in a thirty year feud between his mysterious chess playing friend and the devastating menace of the Impundulu.

Genre: Action Thriller

Example for Action:

Purpose: Adrenaline- Stirring/Fast Paced

Demand for Action:

Mission: To find out about the city’s apparent problem with missing children all the while a powerful vampire has come to town.

Escalating Action: Slowly but surely Bennett begins to understand these strange happenings are a little bit out of his league, and oddly enough his best friend Silas is somehow connected.

Hero: James Bennett is a no nonsense veteran homicide detective who’s very good at his job but it no longer gives him purpose. Well he’s about to run into something that will change all of that.

Antagonist: Elimane is a tortured soul, literally. He’s a cursed vampire known as the Impundulu. He was enslaved by a witch and was unable to deal with his longtime foe Silas until his indebtedness was fulfilled. Now that it is he’s come to Silas’ hometown for a little payback.

Act 1: A cheating pastor getting done with doing the do, quickly goes to a meeting at the Assembly of the Undead where Elimane decapitates Sigmund

The inciting incident When Silas destroys Eli’s lair that also houses all his eggs.

Turning Point can possibly be when the witch gives Silas her secret lover the weapon she created to keep the Impundulu in check.

Act 2: New Plan: Bennett is now on board that these happenings are no where near normal and begins to brace Silas for intel also we find out that Bennett’s dope smoking partner is actually a Lycan.

Act 3: Rethink Everything:

New Plan:

Silas lets Bennett know that he knows his secret

Turning Point: Huge Failure Elimane kills Silas.

Act 4: Watson comes to the funeral and properly shows Bennett how to wield the Leopard’s Claw effectively Cassie and grandson are found,

Bennett and Rick have a showdown with Elimane and his crew in the abandoned warehouse

the catacombs

[Brian Atkins]

Hi, Cheryl I hope this is fine to post my assignment here.

It’s the one where Hal is talking about subtext. please let me know if there’s another way to send it or if I’m doing it right.

I want to be known as a great writer, one who is able to create a moving, compelling, story that touches on various social ills, as well as personal triumphs and tragedies that I can use to relate to others.

Subject line: Brian’s Subtext Plot

I learned that when characters have personal agendas and motives it helps them to be more human and relatable.

My concept deals with multiple cover ups and ulterior motives throughout. Whereas we see that the towns people are a lot of times worse than the vampires. We also questionable “good guys”. The ones I am using are 1. Scheme & Investigation, 2. Layering, and 3. Someone hides who they are

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[Brian Atkins]

<b tabindex=”-1″ data-thread-perm-id=”thread-a:r775684605548290512″ data-legacy-thread-id=”188b1266ddb3e439″>Brian TITLE, CONCEPT, CHARACTER STRUCTURE

I want to be known as a great writer. One who is able to create a moving compelling story that touches on a lot of social ills, as well as personal triumphs and tragedies that I can use to relate to others.

What I learned from this assignment was that I’m beginning to see the pieces come together and to grasp the formulation of it all.

TITLE: BENNETT & THE IMPUNDULU

CONCEPT: A HOMICIDE DETECTIVE INADVERTENTLY BECOMES A VAMPIRE HUNTER AFTER HE BECOMES ENTANGLED IN A 30 YEAR OLD CONFLICT BETWEEN HIS MYSTERIOUSLY AGED CHESS PLAYING FRIEND AND THE DEVASTATING POWER OF THE IMPUNDULU, WHO’S TRAVELLED ALL THE WAY FROM AFRICA TO HIS MIDWEST HOMETOWN.

MY CHARACTER STRUCTURE IS : DRAMATIC TRIANGLE

PLEASE LET ME KNOW U RECIEVED THIS

[Brian Atkins]

BRIAN ATKINS

I want to be known as a great writer. One who is able to create a moving compelling story that touches on a lot of social ills, as well as personal triumphs and tragedies that I can use to relate to others.

Concept: A homicide detective inadvertently becomes a vampire hunter after he gets entangled in a 30 year old conflict between his mysteriously aged chess playing friend and the devastating power of the Impundulu who’s travelled all the way from Africa to wreak havoc on this midwest town.

Favorite Title 1: THEY DON’T ALL WEAR FANGS or NOT ALL WEAR FANGS

Favorite Title 2: BENNETT & THE IMPUNDULU

I learned from this assignment how much intent needs to go into the title and how the right title will leave an indelible impression on the audience for a lifetime. And also there’s something of a science to it or at least the connection of the title to the audience’s response to the overall film as a whole.

[Brian Atkins]

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[Brian Atkins]

Hi, everyone I’m Brian,

I have a couple of scripts in the gestation stage so to speak, hoping this class will help me get one over the finish line.. I have however written a stageplay that is published, and am hoping to have it produced.

I really hope to gain some insight on how to get unstuck and brainstorm more. And just unlock the stagnancy that I can get into.

What’s special about me is that I have an independent entertainment company that specializes in the four main mediums of music, writing, video, art.

[Brian Atkins]

HI, THIS IS TO EITHER JOANNE OR RUTHIE I AM AT THE STAGE OF TRADING OUTLINES AND WOULD LIKE TO FIND SOMEONE FOR THAT FEEDBACK EXCHANGE… PLEASE LET ME KNOW I’M BRIAN ATKINS BTW

[Brian Atkins]

Hey Alyssa to be honest I’m really not sure where I am I think I’m just now beginning to vaguely understand the flow of our class the knowledge is GREAT N INCREDIBLE im just having a learning curve on this format with the modules etc. hope to be caught up soon

[Brian Atkins]

hey Alyssa I’d love to do that as well I really would like feedback I’m on my way to work now but perhaps in a day or so we can do that… My work schedule is 6pm -6am mostly but let me know what works best for you

[Brian Atkins]

Thas Awesome Michael, looking forward to it

[Brian Atkins]

Thnx JoAnn, yes I am of sorts now it’s time to laser focus. What are your favorite things to write?

[Brian Atkins]

thnx B. preciate u