Jeannine Hegelbach
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Hi, my name is Jeannine and i am a screenwriter / director from Switzerland.
I have completed 3 scripts, one TV pilot and about 7 shortfilm scripts.
In this class I hope to connect with other writers, maybe find a great writing partner ( I love to exchange and co-write), improve my writing and marketing skills and keep focused on one project.
<div>I have been blessed to travel and dive into other people’s life that are completely different then mine. I lived a month with a tribe in the Amazon, where the shamans showed me how they heal with plant medicine. I toured with an African circus, visited sumo fighters in Japan, and last year went to the Arctic with a crazy light artist, that projected images onto floating icebergs from a fishing boat of the Inuits. 😊
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Jeannine Hegelbach
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<div>Jeannine Hegelbach’s Action Structure
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Jordan gets dropped in a jail cell among gang members, unconscious, beaten up and tortured. He wakes up and has to defend himself against the other inmates.
Inciting Incident
He starts to remember being interrogated and accused of the murder of his twin brother.
First Turning Point at end of Act 1
Jordan heats up gang members against each other and manages to escape the prison and run into the desert.
Mid-Point
Jordan finds out that the CIA is after him and that his brother might connected to them.
Second Turning Point at end of Act 2
Jordan falls for the deception of Beckster and runs right into the trap set up in the CIA training facility.
Crisis
Beckster sends his twin brother out to kill him, controlled by the brain implant, and Jordan has to kill him, if he wants to survive.
Climax
Jordan fights Beckster and was able to reprogram his brother.
Resolution
Jordan finds out from this twin brother, that Beckster was their father and tried to revenge the loss of their mother.
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Jeannine Hegelbach’s Action Track
A. Considering the concept from Lesson 1,
what action could naturally show up in this movie?
B. Considering the Mission and Villain
Tracks, what action could work for this track?
C. How can the action start well, build
in the 2nd Act, and escalate to a climax in the 3rd Act?A
One on one combat, bacom, street fight, gladiator fight, gun fire, helicopter chases, car chases, infrared night vision camera on the border, infrared cameras and satellite images for catching illegal immigrants at the border, prison escape, kidnapping, deception of gang members so they kill each other and prison guards, shank weapons to overwhelm prison guards, memorizing codes for unlocking prison locks, hiding under vehicles, placing bombs in the prison that detonate at a certain time, knowledge of chemicals used to make bombs, escape from gang prison full of violence, super-prison highly armed and new facility with fingerprint scans and codes, torture with bamboo growing underneath him, rats that are hungry that will eat him alive, sleep deprivation, set fire to the vehicle with a body in it, so the police thinks he is dead, jumping on a high-speed train from a bridge, disguise and faking the identity of the doctor of the CIA program,
Inspired by Houdini, super flexible,
What I learned doing this assignment is, that thinking about the action made me come up with a new USP and ideas for how to twist the story to make it more interesting without effort.
1. INTERROGATION Jordan is blindfolded and captured in a room, tied up in shackles to a desk. An agent questions him in Spanish about his brother’s disappearance. Jordan has no idea what has happened to him. Behind a window somebody watches, puts out a Cuban cigar…
2. TORTURE Jordan did not get water for 2 days. He is dehydrated and sleep deprived. He gets waterboarded. Back in his cell he can’t sleep because hungry rats attack him and try to eat him alive.
3. LOCKED UP Jordan gets transferred into a maximum-security prison with rival gangs.
4. ATTACK In the overcrowded cell Jordan must fight gang members to secure his place in the pecking order.
5. SOCIAL ENGINEERING In order to escape from prison he starts heating up two gangs against each other.
6. PRISON REVOLT During the prison revolt that he starts, he can escape the cell and takes a prison guard hostage with a shank.
7. DECEPTION He takes the guards clothes and his weapon locking him up and drive out of the prison with a car.
8. SNIPER His escape gets noticed through an implant he did not know he had, and snipers shoot down his car. He must cut out the implant and flee into the desert by foot.
9. DEADLY ENVIRONMENT Without water he collapses in the desert, but then is discovered by illegal immigrants who give him water and food.
10. BORDER CROSSING Together with the illegal immigrants he tries to cross the border to the US, they get captured.
11. ESCAPE They want to take DNA samples and Jordan gets into a combat, escapes, and jumps from a bridge onto the roof of a high-speed train.
12. UNDERGROUND Jordan arrives in Houston and hides out trying to find out what happened to his twin brother and where he might be.
13. POLICE The police are looking for him and they want to arrest him in a backstreet in Houston. He disarms two police officers and kills the two arriving teams as well. Now he is definitively on the run. In the first police car he runs the system and sees that his brother is reported missing.
14. NIGHT ATTACK At night back at the motel a group of CIA agents try to assassinate him. He kills them all.
15. NEW CLUE In the dead agents pocket he finds a chipcard with an address of a CIA headquarter. He decides to go there.
16. DISGUISE A guy with a similar stature like him leaves the CIA facility for lunch and Jordan sedates him with a syringe, steals his clothes and cuts of his finger for the fingerprint ID. In his wallet he finds his doctor’s card.
17. NEW CLUE When he must hide behind his papers, he accidently sees that his brother is under the “care” of this doctor. He searches the facility and the patient rooms to find his brother.
18. RESCUE Finally he finds his brother, but he seems to be unconscious and with a big scar on his shaved head. They have given him a brain implant. Beckster shows up. Jordan is trapped.
19. COMBAT Beckster fights Jordan, but he cannot kill him.
20. KILLING MACHINE He activates the brain implant from Jordan’s brother to go after him, he assumes that Jordan will kill everybody but not his brother. Beckster is ready to watch this spectacle go down like a gladiator fight. But Jordan kills his brother.
21. BACK UP Now Beckster is alone in the room with Jordan and he is going after him. But suddenly Jordan’s Brother wakes up again. Jordan has reprogrammed him secretly. They both fight Beckster together and kill him.
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Jeannine Hegelbach’s Villains track
What I learned, doing this assignment is, that I can look at the movie from different perspective and come up with new ideas through this.
Villain: Wayne Beckster, Head of the CIA sleeper agent program
Hero: prisoner Jordan Silverman
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Plan: Plan pre-existed, but the villain has to adapt and come up with a new plan when Jordan escapes the prison and reenters the US
B
Ways the villain can attack: accuse Jordan of the murder of his twin brother and send him to the worst prison, where he likely will get killed, he can alarm the authorities to help find Jordan, send out the CIA sleeper agents to kill him, torture him, send out his own twin brother and program him to kill him.
C
Advantages of the villain: He has a nearly unlimited amount of sleeper agents, he is in contact with the US authorities and the border patrol, he works with brain implants that controls the twin brother, he has nearly unlimited financial resources and weapons
D
Fitting end: Jason and his twin brother fight together and Beckster gets killed by the two of them
Beckster’s Plan:
1. INCARCERATE: Beckster let’s Jordan’s twin brother disappears and arranges that Jordan looks like he has killed his brother. Jordan gets deported and will mostly likely be killed by the gangs inside the prison.
2. ALERT AUTHORITIES: When Jordan reenters the US, Beckster alarms the US authorities that a murderer is on the loose and makes sure, that the police is looking for him and takes care of the rest.
3. SEND OUT AGENTS: Beckster sends out regular CIA agents to kill Jordan, but they fail.
4. ACTIVE SLEEPER AGENTS: Beckster must step up his game, when he finds out that his agents have been killed. He sends out his best sleeper agents that are ruthless killers because they have been programmed unconsciously.
5. DECEPTION: When that fails, he changes his strategy and sacrifices a CIA agents by sending him to kill Jordan, knowing that he will fail and give Jordan the information where his twin brother is held.
6. SET A TRAP: He lures Jordan into the CIA headquarters to capture him, where he is equipped the best and Jordan can’t escape anymore.
7. EMOTIONAL TRIGGER: Beckster sends out Jordan’s twin brother who is controlled by a brain implant to kill Jordan in an arena like setting.
8. DEADLY STING: Surprisingly Jordan does not hold back and kills his twin brother. Beckster has no choice to flee out of the room and to send in all his remaining agents.
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Day 3 Jeannine Hegelbach’s hero’s mission track
What I learned doing this, I am able to surprise myself and having some ideas for twists while writing that I have not thought of before.
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A. What is it about this Hero that will have
them go straight into the face of the overwhelming odds?
</div><div>He has been in one of
the hardest mega prisons in South America, locked up with brutal gang members.
He has learned to fight Bacom from them, one of the deadliest martial art forms
in the world. He has been trained as a sleeper agent, is physically fit
because of the daily training in the prison and highly intelligent.B. What is the mission that would be an
impossible goal?The breakout of the
toughest prisons where not even the worst gang members can get out, fight a
group of highly trained agents of the CIA and find out about the where
abouts of his lost and maybe killed twin brother.C. What strong internal and external
motivation could drive the hero?Internal motivation:
find out if his brother is dead and what happened to him, free him of the
accusation of the murder of his twin brother.
External motivation: The
CIA wants him dead, once he escaped the prison.D. Imagine that mission playing out across a
story. What could naturally happen if this hero went on this mission
against this villain?Breaking out of the prison, getting back into the usa, finding out
where his brother went missing in the underground, fighting the CIA agents
that want to kill him, fighting the CIA boss, fighting his brother, expose
the program.</div>
Clear Mission: Find out what happened to his twin brother and who is responsible for his disappearance.
<div>Motivation: he got accused of the murder of his
twin brother and thrown in a gang prison in El Salvador
Inciting Incident: he wakes up totally beaten up in a South
America gang prison, he finds out that he was put in jail for the murder
of his twin brother and the inmates beat him up for this
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First Action: he has to break out of prison and to get
back onto US territory
Escape: Jordan must
collaborate with gang members in order to work out an escape plan to
overwhelm the guards and get out of prison. From there he needs help from
them to organize a ride through the desertObstacle: Since the CIA is responsible for his
trip to prison he has to cross the border illegally to get back into the
US and find his brotherEscalation: at the illegal border crossing he gets
arrested and they want to take his DNA together with some other illegal
immigrants, he has to fight against the whole border patrol and escapeOverwhelming Odds: in the fight a border patrol agent
scratched him and they know that he is back in the usa and the CIA is
informed. Beckster sends out CIA sleeper agents to find and kill him.Twist: He identifies a
doctor of the sleeper agent program, kills him and steals his chip and his
identity to get him inside the facility.New Plan: Jordan tries to get access to the file
and he finds records that his twin brother got a chip implanted in his brain,
he finds his locationApparent success: he
finds his brother, but he is not responsive and lies in a kind of comaApparent defeat: it turns
out to be a trap and when Jordan gets there he is captured and tortured by
the CIAFull out Attack: Beckster programs the twin brother to
kill his brother and plans to watch it like in an arena with a gladiator
fightTwist: Jordan has no
choice but to kill his brother, surprised Beckster sends in more agents to
kill JordanTwist: but Jordan has
reprogrammed his twin brother secretly over the chip. He reawakens and the
two of them fight the agentsSuccess: Jordan and his brother kill Beckster
and find out that he was their father who was left by their mother, because
she wanted to protect them from his violent nature and he tried to revenge
that.</div>
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Jeannine Hegelbach’s Hero and Villan
Concept:
Hero Morally Right: Jordan Silverman, the hero is trying to
find out what happened to his missing brother
Villain Morally Wrong: Wayne Beckster, the head of the sleeper
agent program abducts the twin brother and claims that the hero murdered himHero Jordan Silverman – prisoner
A. Unique Skill Set: trained during his time in prison in
bacom, one of the deadliest martial arts in the world, learned from other
criminals about weapons
B. Motivation: wants to find his brother or what
happened to him and if he is really dead, wants to reestablish his honor
C. Secret or Wound: his brother saved his life when they
were 8 years oldVillain Wayne Beckster – head of sleeper program CIA
A. Unbeatable: has an army of sleeper agents at his
disposal, is in a high position in the CIA
B. Plan/Goal send out his twin brother himself to
kill Jordan ironically
C. What they lose if Hero survives: expose the program and that the CIA is
working with brain implantsImpossible Mission Jordan has to find out what happened to his brother and redeem his honor.
A. Puts Hero in Action he has to infiltrated into the CIA,
fight other agents, work with explosives and gets involved in gun fights
B. Demands They Go Beyond Their Best: he has to ultimately fight his own
brother to not get killed by him
C. Destroy the Villain – expose the CIA program
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Jeannine Hegelbach’s Conventions
What I learned doing this assignment is, that for the development of an action movie I can work in a methodical way by brainstorming different initial elements like unusual weapons, a hero with a unique skill set, mission, unique setting, unbeatable antagonist to find the rest of the story.
Conventions
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Hero: a sleeper agent, imprisoned for the murder of his
twin brother in a high-security gang prison in El Salvador
</div><div>Demand For Action: break out of prison and find his brother
or what happened to himMission: to find out what happened to his twin brother
Antagonist: the head of the sleeper agent program working
with brain implantsEscalating Action: they send his own twin brother, who is
controlled by a brain implant out to kill himConcept: To find out what happened to his twin brother for whose murder he is incarcerated
in a gang prison in South America, a sleeper agent must break out and fight the
CIA.</div>
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Hi everyone, my name is Jeannine Hegelbach, currently living in Switzerland.
I have written about 3 features and several shorts, but also a lot of unfinished stories laying around. I hope to improve my writing skills and get motivation to bring a project through the finish line. 😀
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Jeannine Hegelbach I agree to the terms of this release form.
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Yes, I am fortunate that I was able to see so much of the world and have crazy and wonderful experiences in my life. So now I am curious what is left on your bucket list…?
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Thank you. I have some good and crazy stories that happened to me. I think it is hard to write if you have not lived and experienced a lot. What do you think?
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Thank you. Yours are not too bad either. 😉 Although I would be probably the wrong person to be in a space shuttle. I get super easy car sick and I like to have a lot of space. I imagine that in a space ship space is a bit limited. 😁 What’s one place where you would like to go but never been?
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There are several things that are really nice about Switzerland: the nature is very clean like the rivers and all. It is a very safe country and we have a really good social security system. Of course like every country it has its good and its bad sides. One of the things I don’t like too much is, that in general people are a bit close-minded. 😆 What country are you from and what do you like and dislike there?