[Jo Ann (Jodie) Randisi]

DAY 4 ASSIGNMENT:
What I learned: Fleshing out the structure identifies how the plot will or won’t work. It also opens up ways to explore subplots between characters, which is what I’m looking forward to creating next.

Genre: Female-led buddy comedy
Title: Pamperus Island
Concept: Two rival real estate agents join forces despite being women of opposite personalities and backgrounds based on the advice of a scheming industrial psychologist.

Act 1: Normal world
Opening: Elizabeth and Lovie as children reveal their traits, Elizabeth the snob insults her nanny while playing Barbies (she’s Jr. League Barbie while Nanny is Biker and Goth Barbie); Tomboy Lovie looks for the perfect location to build a fort Then we see the same traits emerge as adults when both women end up at the same restaurant to celebrate their birthdays. Elizabeth and her stuffy tri-delt sorority sisters (and their gifts) versus Lovie and her witty sisterhood

Inciting Incident: While at a real estate convention in Las Vegas, Elizabeth and Love win a coaching program with Dr. Kirk Deller, the keynote speaker and industrial psychologist on the lookout for subjects for his human behavior experiments

Turning Point: Both women meet privately with Dr. Deller, each one seeking his approval; they agree to his suggestion of partnership at the real estate office

Act 2: Challenge the Old Ways
New plan: Dr, Deller incentivizes both women to stay partners despite their methods of attracting selling clients are vastly different. He educates Mrs. Murray as to how she will be his accomplice.

Plan in action: Under the guise of office manager, Mrs. Murray sets up appointments that ensure both agents get wrong clients, wrong open houses, addresses, etc.

Midpoint Turning Point: We find out Deller is behind the scenes working pitching a reality television show about Human Behavior in the Workplace and is not getting great feedback, so he ups the chaos. Mrs. Murray switches side and decides to work with Lovie and Elizabeth to sabotage Deller.

Act 3: Re-Evaluation
Rethink Everything: Deller finds out Mrs. Murray is a double agent and has to come up with a plan to disrupt her plans so he can close the deal on the TV and book deal he has in the works.

New plan: Deller blackmails everyone in the office with the dirt he has found on them, either through background checks, or flagrant disasters he sets up so he can continue to manipulate their behavior

Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift: Elizabeth and Lovie employ local wildly eccentric characters who line up to play along so they can mess with Deller’s experiments, except Elizabeth has fallen in love with Deller (who was repulsive to her earlier) and plans to help him seal the deal so she can star and look amazing in the TV show

Act 4: Climax
Ultimate expression of the conflict: Lovie convinces Elizabeth they are better together than the scheming psychologist, so she proposes a radical solution to discredit Deller. They somehow turn the whole experimental psychology chaos back onto Deller.

Resolution: Elizabeth and Lovie end up writing the book and sealing the TV deal. They somehow turn the whole experiment on Deller. Despite their differences, they end up enjoying each other’s disparities and learn that human connection defies categorization. Their breakthrough upsets stereotypes and proves they are more than the sum of their dysfunctions.

I still haven’t found out how to get AI feedback after marking complete. What am I missing?

[Jo Ann (Jodie) Randisi]

What I learned: Fleshing out characters in this fashion will definitely lead me to a bunch of comedic situations. Doing this as a preliminary exercise is now a prerequisite and a tool in my scriptwriting tool belt.
Genre: Female buddy comedy
Title: Pamperus Island
Concept: Two rival real estate agents join forces despite being women of opposite personalities and backgrounds based on the advice of a scheming industrial psychologist.
Lead Character: Real estate agent Elizabeth Rutherford Jones,
Role: Lead character who is paired with her exact opposite for a staged partnership
Traits: Self-absorbed, dramatic, and excessively demanding, she lives and breathes high society
Motivation: Elizabeth struggles with the pressures of maintaining her image, which makes her life feel more like a full-time performance rather than a fulfilling career, and that includes selling more than her partner to maintain appearances
Wound: Ignored by family, so she spends her way to happiness and into debt
What makes Elizabeth funny: Outrageous expectations lead to bizarre requests, dramatic outbursts and sarcastic quips, revealing just how clueless she is about “common” folk
Lead Character: Real estate agent Lovie (not the coach) Smith
Role: Lead character partnered with her exact opposite for a staged partnership
Traits: down-to-earth and refreshingly candid, street-smart realtor comes from humble beginnings, has a knack for understanding the “regular folks” because of her deep connection with the community. Her casual, laid-back demeanor makes her approachable.
Motivation: Inventive, humorous, with a penchant for street slang, comes across as brash, but her heart is in the right place and she genuinely cares for clients. Can’t stand pretentious people, especially her partner.
Wound: Married too young to an abusive man that led to her arrest for domestic abuse when it should have been him
What makes Lovie funny: Her antics clash with Elizabeth’s high standards, her creative, sometimes dubious tactic make sales that lead to hilarious misunderstandings.
Straight Guy: Mrs. Murray (Wild Card)
Role: Self-appointed office manager at Pamerus Island Realty and accomplice to Dr. Deller’s psychological experiments
Traits: Feisty, brash, shameless, sharp-tongued, organized
Motivation: Elizabeth’s longtime housekeeper seeking to elevate her status as well as her income
Wound: Severely underappreciated and over managed by Elizabeth
What makes Mrs. Murray funny: Caustic humor appreciated and celebrated by everyone except Elizabeth now that she manages the real estate office, has a knack for observational humor, especially regarding ridiculous demands made by obnoxious or weirdo clients
Conflict Character: Dr. Kirk Deller
Role: Industrial psychologist, pairs two opposite professionals so he can observe human behavior
Traits: Eccentric, scheming, overly confident, exudes an Indian Jones metrosexual persona, fiercely competitve
Motivation: He’s writing a book about his unconventional experiments, is delirious for fame, he has to orchestrate ridiculous stunts to outshine his competition
Wound: His rival’s book has turned into a reality television show, he lives to prove he’s the best although he’s clearly not
What makes Dr. Deller funny: He twists situations, purposely creating awkward situations disguised as unconventional experiments resulting in comedic chaos

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[Jo Ann (Jodie) Randisi]

What I learned: I have to admit, the process is easier with AI. I asked ChatGPT to define the theme and I couldn’t have said it better…though I was thinking it, I just couldn’t have said it so succinctly. Which will be helpful if (or when) I get to pitch this to a producer or manager, etc.
• Genre: Female-led buddy comedy
• Logline: Two wildly mismatched real estate agents are forced into an uneasy partnership by a scheming psychologist—leading to sabotage, self-discovery, and some extremely chaotic open houses.
• Theme: Human connection defies categorization.
• Main Conflict: Opposites are forced to work together so an industrial psychologist can study them.
• Stakes: Personal Stakes: Identity & Self-Worth, Each character is being observed, categorized, and judged—often unfairly—by someone in power. They’re being reduced to labels: “Type A,” “Slacker,” “Entitled,” “Unstable,” etc. The fear: What if I really am the label?
• Transformational Journey: The reward: breaking the stereotype and proving they’re more than the sum of their dysfunctions

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[Jo Ann (Jodie) Randisi]

Day One ASSIGNMENT:
WHAT I LEARNED: After using ChatGPT and QuickWrite AI programs to round out my characters and create funny scenes, I ended up with ideas that I can work with but not use as given. AI speeds up creativity. Thanks for the prompts!
GENRE: Female-led buddy comedy
CONCEPT: Opposites are forced to work together so an industrial psychologist can study them in the cutthroat coastal real estate world of Pamperus Island.
LOGLINE: Two wildly mismatched real estate agents are forced into an uneasy partnership by a manipulative psychologist—leading to sabotage, self-discovery, and some extremely chaotic open houses.
MAIN CHARACTERS:
ELIZABETH JONES – Late 40s, a hyper-polished, social-climbing perfectionist real estate agent. Thinks sarcasm is tacky. Elizabeth Jones presents a waterfront home in full Stepford Realtor mode—heels clacking, voice syrupy, completely dead inside. The epitome of elegance, Elizabeth lives and breathes high society. Her perfectly manicured nails and designer outfits scream excess, and she has an Instagram feed that showcases her flawlessly staged properties against the backdrop of her gated mansion. A modern-day socialite, Elizabeth is obsessed with emulating the region’s elite, especially the local “rich bitch” icon, Ruby Sparks Barrington, who is notorious for her cutting wit and extravagant parties designed to launch friends in their ridiculous non-essential business ventures. Elizabeth struggles with the pressures of maintaining her image, which makes her life feel more like a full-time performance rather than a fulfilling career. She’s anxious to impress and remains oblivious to the fact that her rigid standards can be alienating.
LOVIE SMITH – Mid-40s, earthy, irreverent, barefoot as often as possible. Grew up locally. A down-to-earth, street-smart realtor, Lovie comes from humble beginnings and has a knack for understanding the “regular folks.” She drives an old minivan that’s more hippie fixer-upper than luxury vehicle. Her casual, laid-back demeanor makes her approachable to clients. With a hearty laugh and a smattering of sarcasm, she often compares the pretentious nature of the upper class to “carrying around a load of bricks.” Motivated by a desire to help others and never getting trapped in a cycle of superficiality, Lovie uses her wit and charm to connect with the community, often hosting barbecues and street fairs to build rapport and draw in potential clients.

PROFESSOR KIRK DELLER – A scheming, handsome, Indian Jones wannabe, professor of industrial psychology (conflict character) who uses Elizabeth and Lovie as subjects in his experiment. An eccentric psychologist specializing in personality types, Prof. Deller believes that every successful realtor must cater to their extroverted and introverted clients. He suggests that teaming Lovie and Elizabeth would create a perfect balance — a duo that can meet both the common and elite needs of Pampers Island.
MRS. MURRAY – Office manager, Mrs. Murray is a shameless, sharp-tongued, feisty older woman who has been paid and tasked to keep the two agents united so the covert psychological experiments can continue. Deller’s behind-the-scenes accomplice and office manager of the real estate business.

SHORT SYNOPSIS: Behind his thick glasses and white lab coat costume, Deller appears inept only to reveal his true Indiana Jone metrosexual persona at the real estate convention where Smith and Jones win a free 6-month coaching program. He and his staff suggest bizarre strategies that are, unbeknownst to Smith and Jones, actually unconventional psychological experiments. As long as they stay in business as a team, Deller is behind the scenes, creating awkward situations he can observe.

What makes this movie or show funny? When socioeconomic classes collide, someone has to pick up the pieces. People of all distinctions have issues, and money is only one of them.

[Jo Ann (Jodie) Randisi]

I clicked COMPLETE before posting this assignment. I didn’t see the AI feedback option.

[Jo Ann (Jodie) Randisi]

Jodie Randisi, I agree to the terms of this release form.
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[Jo Ann (Jodie) Randisi]

Hi everyone,
Name: Jodie Randisi
Four scripts written, but after this class, there will be more than four!
What I hope to get out of this class? I intend to use AI to enhance what I’ve written and will write. Growtha nd confidence.
Something unusual: I have been a mentor and member of a prison Toastmaster club since 2016. OH, the incredible stories I’ve heard.

[Jo Ann (Jodie) Randisi]

John, are you going to https://screenwritingclasses.com/classes. Then look for My Courses. Hope this helps. Jodie Randisi