[Jodie Randisi]

What I learned from this assignment…since my concept is congruent vs. incongruent, I need to take every scene to the limit without judging ideas. If I don’t, I won’t get to the LYAO scenarios. Be ridiculous, NOT predictable.

Concept: Opposites are forced to work together so an industrial psychologist can study them in the cutthroat coastal real estate world of Pamperus Island.

INT. HOTEL LADIES ROOM
We see Lovie in the mirror. She lifts her arms, her tight shirt soaked with perspiration. She tries to dry her arm pits one at a time using the hand blow dryer.
Lovie sniffs. The results aren’t good. She pulls her shirt off, but it gets stuck around her head, arms flap feverishly.
Elizabeth comes in.
LOVIE
Liz? Is that you? Help me out here.
ELIZABETH
What the hell are you doing?
Lovie’s body turns every which way until Elizabeth stops her twirling. Reluctantly, Elizabeth pulls Lovie’s shirt off.
LOVIE
Thanks. I’m glad it was you.
ELIZABETH
I’m not.
Lovie rinses the shirt under the faucet. Squeezes the excess water, then takes the shirt to the dryer.
ELIZABETH
(loudly) Aren’t we in a hotel? Don’t you have other clothes in your room?
LOVIE
How was your meeting with Professor Kirk?
Lovie splashes the water under her armpits, giving herself a bird bath.
ELIZABETH
Great. He thinks I’m great. So great.
LOVIE
Really? He thinks I’m brilliant.
HALLWAY – MOMENTS LATER
Kirk walks toward the restrooms. He starts to enter the MEN’S ROOM but stops when he hears Lovie and Elizabeth.
ELIZABETH
I think he’s completely bogus.
LOVIE
Well, I’m not ashamed to admit I’m a player in a slump. I’ll do whatever it takes. Bust an ovary if I have to.
Kirk bursts into the ladies room. Lovie forgets she’s standing there in her bra.
KIRK
(looks at Lovie’s chest) Hello, girls. This just came to me. You’re looney. You’re a toon. Together you could be looney tunes.
ELIZABETH
Get the hell out of here!
KIRK
Under one shingle, Smith and Jones, partners selling the Pamperus Island life.
LOVIE AND ELIZABETH
What? Us? Together?
KIRK
The attention of two women is irresistible to most customers.
LOVIE
Oh, yeah, that’ll happen. We’re not even compatible. Sorry, Liz, but you’re a Jones. I’m a Smith. You know what I mean?
ELIZABETH
‘Deed, I do.
LOVIE
I shop at Target, not Talbots.
ELIZABETH
I have people who shop for me.
LOVIE
I have friends, not people.
ELIZABETH
She’s got cellulite!
LOVIE
She’s got a crown and I’m not talking about teeth!
ELIZABETH
She shoots guns.
LOVIE
She shoots one over par.
(to Elizabeth)
I’m assuming.
KIRK
Stop. The two of you just made my case. Is that a Wonder Bra?
Lovie suddenly realizes she’s shirtless. Elizabeth covers Lovie with her Louis Vuitton satchel.
ELIZABETH
Who’s your boss? I’m going to report you.
KIRK
Like I haven’t seen a woman in a bra before. Get over yourself. And I’m your boss for the next six months. It’s settled. We is better than me. Everyone beneflirts.

[Jodie Randisi]

What I learned…One funny line iesn’t enough. Try harder, Jodie, and you will come up with additional gags.
INT. RESTAURANT – PRESENT
Busy, cozy lunch crowd. Customers. Servers. A table of four refined WOMEN, all in their 40s, laughing politely. ELIZABETH JONES stands up to make a toast.
ELIZABETH
To all my Tri Delt sisters. My special day wouldn’t have been the same without y’all.
CHARLOTTE, PENNY, CAROLINE and Elizabeth clink glasses. Elizabeth’s friends whip out exquisitely WRAPPED GIFTS.
CHARLOTTE
Here’s to our sister Elizabeth, who looks so rested and refreshed and still a size 6.
CAROLINE
To Elizabeth, our fabulous friend who’s been loitering in the fountain of youth.
Caroline hands her a gift.
ELIZABETH
Don’t tell me. I forgot to write ‘no gifts’ on the invitation — again!?
PENNY
(hands over a gift)
Elizabeth Jones. Please let us pamper you.
They scrutinize one another’s gifts as if it were a gift giving competition.
AT THE OTHER END OF THE RESTAURANT
A different group of women celebrate. HELEN, KITTY, FRANNIE and LOVIE SMITH look more easy-going and casual.
Lovie rises to speak. She climb up onto her chair.
LOVIE
(animated)
Here’s to the Yadda-Yadda Sisterhood. My sanity.
KITTY
Here’s to our Lovie, who taught us the true meaning of girlfriend-dom.
HELEN
Here, here.
Lovie stumbles as her high heel pokes a hole in the chair’s fabric.
LOVIE
Oops.
Lovie kicks off her high heels. Frannie catches it.
KITTY
Speech!
LOVIE
To brats and divas. Y’all know who you are.
Frannie points at Kitty and mouths, “Brat.”
Kitty points at Helen and mouths, “Diva.”
LOVIE
And to Frannie who taught me how to drive stick. You shouldn’t have.
Eyes shut, Lovie feigns driving a stick shift. As she shifts into fourth gear, she lifts her foot and falls to the floor in a heap.
On the way down, her arm wallops the HANDSOME SERVER and his TRAY. In SLO MO, he sacrifices the tray to save her. She’s in his arms. It’s romantic.
Helen goes to Lovie’s rescue only to get pushed away.
Handsome Server gently helps her back to her seat.
LOVIE
And I’m stone cold sober. Believe that? (THIS IS THE RUNNING GAG. PEOPLE ALWAYS MISTAKE LOVIE FOR DRUNK WHEN SHE”S NOT)
HANDSOME SERVER
Of course not. How long you telling people it’s been?
AT THE OTHER END OF THE RESTAURANT
Elizabeth’s group reacts to the calamity with disgust.
CHARLOTTE
(with a sneer)
Dra-runk.
Elizabeth gets back to her array of gifts. Puts on a pink golf glove.
ELIZABETH
Thank you, Penny. It’s absolutely adorable.
PENNY
It’s Nicole Miller.
ELIZABETH
Just in time for the Pink Parade tournament. We’re raising for the Boys and Girls Club this year.
CHARLOTTE
Oh, how nice. You got my name right for the press release, didn’t you?
AT THE OTHER END OF THE RESTAURANT
Lovie straightens herself out and hands her business card to the server.
LOVIE
I’ll pay for the damage but they’re buying lunch. Send a bill, Lovie Smith, Pamperus Island Realty. Or bring it by. That is, if you’re in the market.
HANDSOME SERVER
Okay, sure. What’s your BAC? (THIS IS MISINTERPRETATION)
LOVIE
Today, it’s zero, I swear.
HANDSOME SERVER
Really? How do you make a living?
LOVIE
Last time was back in college, and who hasn’t been tested. 0.09, well below the limit.
HANDSOME SERVER
I meant your buyer agent commission, not your blood alcohol content.
LOVIE
Whoops, sorry. It’s just that I’ve been mistaken for drunk so many times when it’s actually just my bubbly personality people con’t help but notice.
As Lovie and her friends leave, they pass Elizabeth’s group.
ELIZABETH
Lovie. Hello. Was that you who fell? You have a good attorney, I hope.
LOVIE
Don’t worry ‘bout me. How’s business, Liz?
ELIZABETH
I’m actually closing on a $3.5 million dollar fixer-upper next week. And you? How are you doing?
LOVIE
This market sucks worse than a ten dollar you know what.
ELIZABETH
I wouldn’t know.
KITTY walks by dangling Lovie’s purse.
KITTY
Forget something?
LOVIE
(taking the purse)
Oh, yeah. I didn’t get the server’s name and phone number.
ELIZABETH
Is he in the market?
LOVIE
Ya never know. It’s such a pissy time to be a realtor. Buyers can’t buy until they sell, yadda, yadda, blah blah blah. Somebody give me a friggin’ contract, pa-leeze!
Helen walks by, hands Lovie her keys.
HELEN
Might need these.
LOVIE
Thanks. See ya at the range.
ELIZABETH
The what now?
LOVIE
Birthday girl gets to pick. A guy at the gun range giving lessons. Free on your birthday.
LOVIE
Obviously not my first pick, but …
(notices the gifts)
… I can’t have everything I want.
ELIZABETH
Nor should you.
LOVIE
What are we celebrating?
ELIZABETH
It’s my anniversary. (WHAT! WE WERE EXPECTING BIRTHDAY)
LOVIE
(looks at the gal pals)
Oh, wow. How’s come your hubby isn’t celebrating? Gotta run. Suppose I’ll see you in Vegas.
ELIZABETH
He’s, ah, delivering a baby, duh. What’s happening in Las Vegas?
LOVIE
Realtor convention. I don’t normally care, but real estate champion-maker, Kirk Deller’s speaking. And well, ya know, with the market the way is, I have to do something, or my business is toast.
ELIZABETH
Good luck with that.
Penny leans in toward Elizabeth, concerned.
PENNY
Let me get this straight, you work?
CHARLOTTE
Dr. Jones not doing well?
Elizabeth rises. Picks up her purse.
ELIZABETH
(walking out)
The Joneses don’t have money problems. Penny, you make it sound like I have ah, ah j-job.
PENNY
(following Elizabeth)
Well, do you work, or not?

[Jodie Randisi]

What I learned doing this assignment: For my opening scene, I chose to reveal character traits in my protagonist as a child. This will set up comedy choices and situations in their adult behavior. AI gave me a great idea for a character’s eventual return, which sets up a running gag. SO HAPPY!

GENRE: Female-led buddy comedy
CONCEPT: Opposites are forced to work together so an industrial psychologist can study them in the cutthroat coastal real estate world of Pamperus Island.

EXT. SOUTHERN MANSION, VERANDA – ESTABLISHING – DAY
An 8-year-old girl, YOUNG ELIZABETH, dumps BARBIE DOLLS out onto the painted porch floor.
NANNY, 18-year old girl, watches from a WICKER CHAIR as the young debutant–in-the-making sets up for playtime.
Young Elizabeth chooses JUNIOR LEAGUE BARBIE.
YOUNG ELIZABETH
Nan-neee, sit down here. We’re going to play cottage.
NANNY
Cottage?
YOUNG ELIZABETH
We’re going to Nantucket. Daddy’s Crabsolutely Not Cottage needs attention, Nanny. We must let the dead winter air out and the fresh air in. Mother simply can’t stand the stench of mothballs and moral decay.
NANNY
Oh? Well, Disco Barbie lives off mothballs and moral decay. What then?
YOUNG ELIZABETH
Then we soiree. We invite all the neighbors over for a cocktail party.
YOUNG ELIZABETH (CONT’D)
(snooty southern accent)
In Ohio, they’ll let any ol’ body in Junior League. All you have to do is ask. I’ve never heard of that before. Have you, Babs?
Young Elizabeth hands Nanny two heavily altered Barbies. BIKER BARBIE has cropped hair with darkened roots, dressed in leathers. DISCO BARBIE has frizzy hair, dressed in 70’s garb and RED PLATFORM SHOES. Your turn, Nan-neee.
NANNY
(as Biker Barbie)
You know what they say in the trailer park, Sunshine.
YOUNG ELIZABETH
(huffs)
Madam Sunshine to you.
NANNY
(as Disco Barbie)
They say…you can’t get in unless you come with biscuits and leave your Dollar Store personality in the parking lot.
YOUNG ELIZABETH
(as Junior League Barbie)
Grandmother says only children and whores wear red shoes. Dignity. It’s not just a word. It’s an accessory.
NANNY
(as Biker Barbie)
Mee Maw says big hair hides small brains.
Out of her toy trunk comes a set of railroad tracks, a quaint cottage and a Mercedes, a double wide and a Harley.
YOUNG ELIZABETH
Your people go here.
NANNY
Be careful, young’un. My people can kick the crap outta your people.
Biker Barbie drop kicks Junior League Barbie.

[Jodie Randisi]

What I learned: I need to repeat this exercise until I laugh out loud. Dumping the bad ideas leads to good ones.
GENRE: Buddy comedy
CONCEPT: Opposites are forced to work together so an industrial psychologist can study them in the cutthroat coastal real estate world of Pamperus Island.

INT. CHIP LEFKOWITZ’S SCENT LAB – PAMPRUS ISLAND MANSION – DAY
The space looks like Versailles collided with an apothecary. Velvet drapes. A MASSIVE portrait of Chip in a silk robe hangs above a marble fireplace. His pose? Reclined. His gaze? Smoldering.

CHIP "THE NOSE" LEFKOWITZ (50s) floats into the room, wearing a tailored lavender smoking jacket and a single leather glove. He carries an atomizer like a weapon. He points to two armchairs facing opposite directions.

ELIZABETH
What is this? Is this some kind of scent-based scavenger hunt?
CHIP
More like a duel. Smell, then sell. You must prove you are able to recognize affluence and can distinguish it from, say… laminate flooring or a 17-year marriage on its last leg.

Chip claps twice. An assistant wheels in a velvet tray holding 12 unmarked amber bottles and two silk blindfolds.

CHIP
This, friends, is The Test of Twelve Notes. May the best nose win.

MONTAGE: “THE TEST” – QUICK CUTS

ELIZABETH (grimacing before sniffing)
If only this were Bergamot. This one smells like the inside of a Pilates instructor’s glove compartment… in August.

LOVIE (smiling) Mmm. Smells like a middle school dance. Axe Body Spray with a healthy dose of future heartbreak.

CHIP Accurate. It’s patchouli, cedar… and a whisper of regret, like… I’m not getting any regret.

Elizabeth coughs after inhaling a mystery note.
ELIZABETH Is this… microwave popcorn and printer toner?

CHIP
That is a synthetic disaster I call “Mall Divorce.”

Lovie gets emotional after sniffing another.
LOVIE This has to be … from the Bitch Barrington’s attic. Smells like mimosas on a fur coat.

CHIP Amazing. I call this one ‘Existential Crisis at Brunch’. You’re a scent empath and I’m obsessed. And this one?

LOVIE Infused with hints of student debt and sandalwood?

CHIP Interesting. It’s part of my limited-edition ‘Daddy Issues’ collection. Next.

ELIZABETH (with confidence) This is definitely jasmine.

LOVIE Elizabeth, your palate is so pedestrian. It’s two mortgages infused with West Elm arrogance.

CHIP So close. Melted Bath & Body Works lotion and shame. But thank you for playing.

Chip places one last vial in front of them.

CHIP
This is the final test. If either of you identifies this scent, you win the listing.

They both inhale.

ELIZABETH
Dior. No, no—Tom Ford. Definitely something exclusive. Leather-forward, mysterious—

LOVIE
(taking her time)
…It’s grief. Bottled grief. But wrapped in satin and carried through a forest in Provence.
You named it… “Elegy for the Ego.”

CHIP
(tearing up)
My God. You felt it.

CHIP
(turns to Elizabeth)
You reek of stress. It needed to be said.

ELIZABETH
(snaps)
Who are you? What gives you the right…?

CHIP
(beat)
Homeowner.

EXT. CHIP'S MANSION – MOMENTS LATER
Elizabeth storms out, still barefoot, muttering about lawsuits and diffusers. Lovie stays behind.

LOVIE
(cheerfully)
Do you validate for spiritual alignment?

CHIP (O.S.)
Only if you sage the foyer on your way out.

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[Jodie Randisi]

“What I learned from doing this assignment is…” Once again, sifting through AI suggestions leads to unexpected comedy that I can work with.

C. ABSURD BEHAVIOR
Lovie and Elizabeth compete to get the listing for Chip Lefkowitz’s mansion. The former fragrance tycoon is downsizing so there is also the possibility that the agent he chooses will also sell him a new home. Upon entering his mansion, Chip insists they call him Nose Knows (opportunities for misinterpretation and embarrassment). They must prove they have a “nose” for luxury, but not before they are asked to remove their shoes and leave their emotional baggage at the outside the front door.

While blindfolded, Lovie and Elizabeth must identify 12 custom scents (opportunities for comedic tragedy, surprises, and physical mishaps). He states his wacky parameters, such as if he detects any scent, even faintly, of laminate flooring or marital resentment, he goes elsewhere. The scene turns into a scent-based obstacle course for desperate realtors.

[Jodie Randisi]

What I learned: Character details, especially flaws, can be exaggerated and strengthened in a well-designed sub plot.

Concept: Opposites are forced to work together so an industrial psychologist can study them in the cutthroat coastal real estate world of Pamperus Island.

Subplot Scene: Romance in the Workplace Subterfuge

Beginning: Elizabeth and Deller meet in his hotel as part of his covert coaching program. She thinks she’s there to discuss situations where she has to report on behavior in the workplace. Elizabeth enjoys making Lovie look bad, which fascinates Deller. Elizabeth has never had so much attention from a man who seems to understand her so well. Admiration for her coach turns into infatuation.

Middle: Elizabeth is unaware that she is being videotaped by cameras hidden in the hotel room. When he leaves the room, he’s still watching her behavior from another room. She can’t resist checking his open computer. She sees her video files and likes that he has multiple closeup shots of her. She mistakes his interest in her for romance.

Resolution: Elizabeth turns the session into a flirtatious episode, which Deller plays along with so he can document data into his experiment. We see Deller write up a scathing report of Elizabeth Jones whom he has a genuine dislike for. He also adds that he’s falling for Lovie

[Jodie Randisi]

DAY 5 ASSIGNMENT
What I learned from doing this assignment: I can cobble together ideas from what AI comes up with. Get this…AI suggested a book written by a real estate broker whose sense of humor turned him into an author and a stand-up comedian, and I bought it. However, the beauty of this exercise is that fitting the funny stuff into a structure, that takes work.

Genre: Female-led buddy comedy
Title: Pamperus Island
Concept: Two rival real estate agents join forces despite being women of opposite personalities and backgrounds based on the advice of a scheming industrial psychologist.

Act 1: Normal world
Opening: Elizabeth and Lovie as children reveal their traits, Elizabeth the snob insults her nanny while playing Barbies (she’s Jr. League Barbie while Nanny is Biker and Goth Barbie); Tomboy Lovie looks for the perfect location to build a fort. Then we see the same traits emerge as adults when both women end up at the same restaurant to celebrate their birthdays. Elizabeth and her stuffy tri-delt sorority sisters (and their gifts) versus Lovie and her witty sisterhood.

What if while celebrating birthdays at a restaurant Lovie makes a complete fool of herself but falls into the arms of a handsome server who gives her a listing right in front of Elizabeth and her friends?

Inciting Incident: While at a real estate convention in Las Vegas, Elizabeth and Love win a coaching program with Dr. Kirk Deller, the keynote speaker and industrial psychologist on the lookout for subjects for his human behavior experiments.

Turning Point: Both women meet privately with Dr. Deller, each one seeking his approval; they agree to his suggestion of partnership at the real estate office
What if both agents try to bribe Deller to sabotage the other one’s career?
What if Deller’s background checks reveal Lovie’s criminal past and Elizabeth’s financial crisis?
What if Lovie is so attracted to Deller’s charismatic personality and good looks she can’t put words together when trying to answer his questions?

Act 2: Challenge the Old Ways
New plan: Dr, Deller incentivizes both women to stay partners despite their methods of attracting selling clients are vastly different. He educates Mrs. Murray as to how she will be his accomplice.

What if Deller uncovers dirt on Mrs. Murray and tells her to “cooperate or else” but Mrs. Murray hires a hitman to get rid of Deller?

Plan in action: Under the guise of office manager, Mrs. Murray sets up appointments that ensure both agents get wrong clients, wrong open houses, addresses, etc.

What if Elizabeth’s client insists on holding a séance to “connect with the home’s past energy,” summoning the ghost of a disgruntled former owner but Elizabeth brings her pastor along to confront witchcraft instead?

What if during a showing a client’s prosthetic leg gets stuck on a footbridge, falls into a creek and washes away?

What if while showing a home they find four ladies playing bridge in the living room but it’s the wrong house and no one says anything until after the showing is over?

Midpoint Turning Point: We find out Deller is behind the scenes working pitching a reality television show about Human Behavior in the Workplace but is not getting great feedback, so he ups the chaos. Mrs. Murray switches side and decides to work with Lovie and Elizabeth to sabotage Deller.

What if Deller sets up a psychology experiment to examine the effects of employee behavior in hierarchical environment, pitting Mrs. Murray (the bully) against both Elizabeth and Lovie?

What if Deller wants to watch how both agents react when Mrs. Murray is put in charge of interviewing new agents, all of whom are eccentric or out of touch with reality but hired anyway?

What if Deller suggests each agent use their own real estate drones, but during a live-streamed tour, the drones get into a mid-air battle that ends in a small electrical fire in Mrs. Murray’s cottage, which leads to Mrs. Murray switching sides.

Act 3: Re-Evaluation
Rethink everything: Deller finds out Mrs. Murray is a double agent and has to come up with a plan to disrupt her plans so he can close the deal on the TV and book deal he has in the works.

What if the new alliance (Team Kirk the Jerk, or Deller Not a Good Fella) intercepts Deller’s files on them and comes up with deep fakes videos to disrupt his literary and or tv relationships/aspirations

What if Mrs. Murray sets up a game where her agents are compelled to compete in a game called Bullshit Bingo where they have to use unrelated words in sentences while giving a presentation for a listing? This is when Mrs. Murray discovers she has human behavior skills, too.

New plan: Deller blackmails everyone in the office with the dirt he has found on them with flagrant disasters he sets up so he can continue to manipulate their behavior

What if a waterfront listing becomes overrun with aggressively territorial crabs and the agent has to finish the showing on the roof?

What if while showcasing a “charming coastal fixer-upper,” they fall through the porch and land in a hidden illegal gator wrestling ring?

What if a fully AI-powered luxury home gets jealous of the client’s affection for Alexa. The house locks the doors and plays Toxic by Britney Spears. The agents have to talk it down like it’s a heartbroken teen.

Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift: Elizabeth and Lovie employ local wildly eccentric characters who line up to play along so they can mess with Deller’s experiments, except Elizabeth has fallen in love with Deller (who was repulsive to her earlier) and plans to help him seal the deal so she can star and look amazing in the TV show.

What if Elizabeth becomes a confederate in Deller’s experiments so she can work against Mrs. Murray and Lovie in their attempts to thwart the book/tv deal from happening?

What if Elizabeth accidentally reveals her desire for Deller during a coaching session that ends in humiliation?

Act 4: Climax
Ultimate expression of the conflict: Lovie convinces Elizabeth they are better together than the scheming psychologist, so she proposes a radical solution to discredit Deller.

What if, with the help of the feisty Mrs. Murray, the two opposite personalities find common ground in sabotaging Deller?
Resolution: Elizabeth and Lovie end up writing the book and sealing the TV deal. Despite their differences, they end up enjoying each other’s disparities and learn that human connection defies categorization. Their breakthrough upsets stereotypes and proves they are more than the sum of their dysfunctions.

What if by working against Deller, Smith and Jones become stars and become the featured motivation speakers experts on human behavior at an Industrial Psychology conference where Deller is in attendance and has to listen to all his failures.

[Jodie Randisi]

DAY 4 ASSIGNMENT:
What I learned: Fleshing out the structure identifies how the plot will or won’t work. It also opens up ways to explore subplots between characters, which is what I’m looking forward to creating next.

Genre: Female-led buddy comedy
Title: Pamperus Island
Concept: Two rival real estate agents join forces despite being women of opposite personalities and backgrounds based on the advice of a scheming industrial psychologist.

Act 1: Normal world
Opening: Elizabeth and Lovie as children reveal their traits, Elizabeth the snob insults her nanny while playing Barbies (she’s Jr. League Barbie while Nanny is Biker and Goth Barbie); Tomboy Lovie looks for the perfect location to build a fort Then we see the same traits emerge as adults when both women end up at the same restaurant to celebrate their birthdays. Elizabeth and her stuffy tri-delt sorority sisters (and their gifts) versus Lovie and her witty sisterhood

Inciting Incident: While at a real estate convention in Las Vegas, Elizabeth and Love win a coaching program with Dr. Kirk Deller, the keynote speaker and industrial psychologist on the lookout for subjects for his human behavior experiments

Turning Point: Both women meet privately with Dr. Deller, each one seeking his approval; they agree to his suggestion of partnership at the real estate office

Act 2: Challenge the Old Ways
New plan: Dr, Deller incentivizes both women to stay partners despite their methods of attracting selling clients are vastly different. He educates Mrs. Murray as to how she will be his accomplice.

Plan in action: Under the guise of office manager, Mrs. Murray sets up appointments that ensure both agents get wrong clients, wrong open houses, addresses, etc.

Midpoint Turning Point: We find out Deller is behind the scenes working pitching a reality television show about Human Behavior in the Workplace and is not getting great feedback, so he ups the chaos. Mrs. Murray switches side and decides to work with Lovie and Elizabeth to sabotage Deller.

Act 3: Re-Evaluation
Rethink Everything: Deller finds out Mrs. Murray is a double agent and has to come up with a plan to disrupt her plans so he can close the deal on the TV and book deal he has in the works.

New plan: Deller blackmails everyone in the office with the dirt he has found on them, either through background checks, or flagrant disasters he sets up so he can continue to manipulate their behavior

Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift: Elizabeth and Lovie employ local wildly eccentric characters who line up to play along so they can mess with Deller’s experiments, except Elizabeth has fallen in love with Deller (who was repulsive to her earlier) and plans to help him seal the deal so she can star and look amazing in the TV show

Act 4: Climax
Ultimate expression of the conflict: Lovie convinces Elizabeth they are better together than the scheming psychologist, so she proposes a radical solution to discredit Deller. They somehow turn the whole experimental psychology chaos back onto Deller.

Resolution: Elizabeth and Lovie end up writing the book and sealing the TV deal. They somehow turn the whole experiment on Deller. Despite their differences, they end up enjoying each other’s disparities and learn that human connection defies categorization. Their breakthrough upsets stereotypes and proves they are more than the sum of their dysfunctions.

I still haven’t found out how to get AI feedback after marking complete. What am I missing?

[Jodie Randisi]

What I learned: Fleshing out characters in this fashion will definitely lead me to a bunch of comedic situations. Doing this as a preliminary exercise is now a prerequisite and a tool in my scriptwriting tool belt.
Genre: Female buddy comedy
Title: Pamperus Island
Concept: Two rival real estate agents join forces despite being women of opposite personalities and backgrounds based on the advice of a scheming industrial psychologist.
Lead Character: Real estate agent Elizabeth Rutherford Jones,
Role: Lead character who is paired with her exact opposite for a staged partnership
Traits: Self-absorbed, dramatic, and excessively demanding, she lives and breathes high society
Motivation: Elizabeth struggles with the pressures of maintaining her image, which makes her life feel more like a full-time performance rather than a fulfilling career, and that includes selling more than her partner to maintain appearances
Wound: Ignored by family, so she spends her way to happiness and into debt
What makes Elizabeth funny: Outrageous expectations lead to bizarre requests, dramatic outbursts and sarcastic quips, revealing just how clueless she is about “common” folk
Lead Character: Real estate agent Lovie (not the coach) Smith
Role: Lead character partnered with her exact opposite for a staged partnership
Traits: down-to-earth and refreshingly candid, street-smart realtor comes from humble beginnings, has a knack for understanding the “regular folks” because of her deep connection with the community. Her casual, laid-back demeanor makes her approachable.
Motivation: Inventive, humorous, with a penchant for street slang, comes across as brash, but her heart is in the right place and she genuinely cares for clients. Can’t stand pretentious people, especially her partner.
Wound: Married too young to an abusive man that led to her arrest for domestic abuse when it should have been him
What makes Lovie funny: Her antics clash with Elizabeth’s high standards, her creative, sometimes dubious tactic make sales that lead to hilarious misunderstandings.
Straight Guy: Mrs. Murray (Wild Card)
Role: Self-appointed office manager at Pamerus Island Realty and accomplice to Dr. Deller’s psychological experiments
Traits: Feisty, brash, shameless, sharp-tongued, organized
Motivation: Elizabeth’s longtime housekeeper seeking to elevate her status as well as her income
Wound: Severely underappreciated and over managed by Elizabeth
What makes Mrs. Murray funny: Caustic humor appreciated and celebrated by everyone except Elizabeth now that she manages the real estate office, has a knack for observational humor, especially regarding ridiculous demands made by obnoxious or weirdo clients
Conflict Character: Dr. Kirk Deller
Role: Industrial psychologist, pairs two opposite professionals so he can observe human behavior
Traits: Eccentric, scheming, overly confident, exudes an Indian Jones metrosexual persona, fiercely competitve
Motivation: He’s writing a book about his unconventional experiments, is delirious for fame, he has to orchestrate ridiculous stunts to outshine his competition
Wound: His rival’s book has turned into a reality television show, he lives to prove he’s the best although he’s clearly not
What makes Dr. Deller funny: He twists situations, purposely creating awkward situations disguised as unconventional experiments resulting in comedic chaos

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[Jodie Randisi]

What I learned: I have to admit, the process is easier with AI. I asked ChatGPT to define the theme and I couldn’t have said it better…though I was thinking it, I just couldn’t have said it so succinctly. Which will be helpful if (or when) I get to pitch this to a producer or manager, etc.
• Genre: Female-led buddy comedy
• Logline: Two wildly mismatched real estate agents are forced into an uneasy partnership by a scheming psychologist—leading to sabotage, self-discovery, and some extremely chaotic open houses.
• Theme: Human connection defies categorization.
• Main Conflict: Opposites are forced to work together so an industrial psychologist can study them.
• Stakes: Personal Stakes: Identity & Self-Worth, Each character is being observed, categorized, and judged—often unfairly—by someone in power. They’re being reduced to labels: “Type A,” “Slacker,” “Entitled,” “Unstable,” etc. The fear: What if I really am the label?
• Transformational Journey: The reward: breaking the stereotype and proving they’re more than the sum of their dysfunctions

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[Jodie Randisi]

Day One ASSIGNMENT:
WHAT I LEARNED: After using ChatGPT and QuickWrite AI programs to round out my characters and create funny scenes, I ended up with ideas that I can work with but not use as given. AI speeds up creativity. Thanks for the prompts!
GENRE: Female-led buddy comedy
CONCEPT: Opposites are forced to work together so an industrial psychologist can study them in the cutthroat coastal real estate world of Pamperus Island.
LOGLINE: Two wildly mismatched real estate agents are forced into an uneasy partnership by a manipulative psychologist—leading to sabotage, self-discovery, and some extremely chaotic open houses.
MAIN CHARACTERS:
ELIZABETH JONES – Late 40s, a hyper-polished, social-climbing perfectionist real estate agent. Thinks sarcasm is tacky. Elizabeth Jones presents a waterfront home in full Stepford Realtor mode—heels clacking, voice syrupy, completely dead inside. The epitome of elegance, Elizabeth lives and breathes high society. Her perfectly manicured nails and designer outfits scream excess, and she has an Instagram feed that showcases her flawlessly staged properties against the backdrop of her gated mansion. A modern-day socialite, Elizabeth is obsessed with emulating the region’s elite, especially the local “rich bitch” icon, Ruby Sparks Barrington, who is notorious for her cutting wit and extravagant parties designed to launch friends in their ridiculous non-essential business ventures. Elizabeth struggles with the pressures of maintaining her image, which makes her life feel more like a full-time performance rather than a fulfilling career. She’s anxious to impress and remains oblivious to the fact that her rigid standards can be alienating.
LOVIE SMITH – Mid-40s, earthy, irreverent, barefoot as often as possible. Grew up locally. A down-to-earth, street-smart realtor, Lovie comes from humble beginnings and has a knack for understanding the “regular folks.” She drives an old minivan that’s more hippie fixer-upper than luxury vehicle. Her casual, laid-back demeanor makes her approachable to clients. With a hearty laugh and a smattering of sarcasm, she often compares the pretentious nature of the upper class to “carrying around a load of bricks.” Motivated by a desire to help others and never getting trapped in a cycle of superficiality, Lovie uses her wit and charm to connect with the community, often hosting barbecues and street fairs to build rapport and draw in potential clients.

PROFESSOR KIRK DELLER – A scheming, handsome, Indian Jones wannabe, professor of industrial psychology (conflict character) who uses Elizabeth and Lovie as subjects in his experiment. An eccentric psychologist specializing in personality types, Prof. Deller believes that every successful realtor must cater to their extroverted and introverted clients. He suggests that teaming Lovie and Elizabeth would create a perfect balance — a duo that can meet both the common and elite needs of Pampers Island.
MRS. MURRAY – Office manager, Mrs. Murray is a shameless, sharp-tongued, feisty older woman who has been paid and tasked to keep the two agents united so the covert psychological experiments can continue. Deller’s behind-the-scenes accomplice and office manager of the real estate business.

SHORT SYNOPSIS: Behind his thick glasses and white lab coat costume, Deller appears inept only to reveal his true Indiana Jone metrosexual persona at the real estate convention where Smith and Jones win a free 6-month coaching program. He and his staff suggest bizarre strategies that are, unbeknownst to Smith and Jones, actually unconventional psychological experiments. As long as they stay in business as a team, Deller is behind the scenes, creating awkward situations he can observe.

What makes this movie or show funny? When socioeconomic classes collide, someone has to pick up the pieces. People of all distinctions have issues, and money is only one of them.

[Jodie Randisi]

I clicked COMPLETE before posting this assignment. I didn’t see the AI feedback option.

[Jodie Randisi]

Jodie Randisi, I agree to the terms of this release form.
GROUP RELEASE FORM
As a member of this group, I agree to the following:
1. That I will keep the processes, strategies, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class confidential, and that I will NOT share any of this program either privately, with a group, posting online, writing articles, through video or computer programming, or in any other way that would make those processes, teleconferences, communications, lessons, and models of the class available to anyone who is not a member of this class.
2. That each writer’s work here is copyrighted and that writer is the sole owner of that work. That includes this program which is copyrighted by Hal Croasmun. I acknowledge that submission of an idea to this group constitutes a claim of and the recognition of ownership of that idea.
I will keep the other writer’s ideas and writing confidential and will not share this information with anyone without the express written permission of the writer/owner. I will not market or even discuss this information with anyone outside this group.
3. I also understand that many stories and ideas are similar and/or have common themes and from time to time, two or more people can independently and simultaneously generate the same concept or movie idea.
4. If I have an idea that is the same as or very similar to another group member’s idea, I’ll immediately contact Hal and present proof that I had this idea prior to the beginning of the class. If Hal deems them to be the same idea or close enough to cause harm to either party, he’ll request both parties to present another concept for the class.
5. If you don’t present proof to Hal that you have the same idea as another person, you agree that all ideas presented to this group are the sole ownership of the person who presented them and you will not write or market another group member’s ideas.
6. Finally, I agree not to bring suit against anyone in this group for any reason, unless they use a substantial portion of my copyrighted work in a manner that is public and/or that prevents me from marketing my script by shopping it to production companies, agents, managers, actors, networks, studios or any other entertainment industry organizations or people.

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[Jodie Randisi]

Hi everyone,
Name: Jodie Randisi
Four scripts written, but after this class, there will be more than four!
What I hope to get out of this class? I intend to use AI to enhance what I’ve written and will write. Growtha nd confidence.
Something unusual: I have been a mentor and member of a prison Toastmaster club since 2016. OH, the incredible stories I’ve heard.

[Jodie Randisi]

John, are you going to https://screenwritingclasses.com/classes. Then look for My Courses. Hope this helps. Jodie Randisi