Julie Umbreit
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Julie writes great hope/fear!
1. Tell us the following:
Concept:
A Swiss DJ (Hans) plans to make his
fortune selling a new, lethal drug, and he recruits teen girls to manufacture
it.
Main
Conflict: Anna, DJ’s daughter, who is
desperate to escape his brutality, and his cult of teen girls.2. Fill in each of these with the answers you have right now.
Act 1:
Opening: DJ holds an illegal rave inside Swiss
mountain bunker. Hope that it is an innocent party of teens having fun.
Fear that DJ is bad guy who forces his daughter Anna to sell drugs to the
party-goers.
Inciting
Incident: Jim, undercover, international
DEA agent, tries to arrest DJ for selling drugs to teens. Hope that DJ
will get caught. Fear that he’ll get away and his daughter Anna will get
caught instead.
Turning
Point: DJ escapes. Fear that Anna will sell new drug to Jim, and he’ll
take it. Hope that Anna and Jim are attracted to each other and enjoy wandering
together. Fear that while flirting, they will get lost in the labyrinth of
the bunker. Hope as she leads him deep into the bunker to find a private
place to make love. Fear that they will be discovered by her father. Hope
that they can find their way out of the maze of the bunker.Act 2:
New
plan: To search for way out of Bunker. Hope that they succeed. Fear that
they will run into DJ.
Plan
in action: Fear when DJ follows them, terrifying them.
Midpoint
Turning Point: Jim reacts to the drug.
Hope that Anna has an antidote that works. Fear that Jim will die
from overdose. Hope that Jim will live. Fear that antidote won’t work.
Hope when it works.Act 3:
Rethink
everything: They confess their true
identities to each other. Hope that
the truth will save the day. Fear when
DJ overhears and confronts them. Hope when DJ runs away and they follow
him, hoping to catch him. Fear when he loses them, and they get even more lost.
New
plan: Hope when they hear noise and
decide to follow the noise, thinking that it’s the DJ. Fear of actually
finding him.
Turning
Point: Huge failure / Major shift: Fear
when they get more and more lost. Hope when they stumble upon a group of teen
girls. Fear when they see they’re manufacturing drugs.Act 4:
Final
plan: Hope to convince teens to
stop making drugs and lead them out of the bunker. Fear when they realize
the teens are drugged and brainwashed by DJ. Hope that they can convince
teens to leave. Fear when teens come after them with hypodermic needles.
Climax/Ultimate
expression of the conflict: Fear when DJ arrives. Hope when he tells teens
to stop. Fear when enraged daughter confronts him. He’s furious. They
battle physically. Hope that she will win using her karate skills. Fear
that he will overwhelm her. Hope when
Jim pulls a gun. Fear when DJ knocks it out of his hand. Fear when DJ orders the teens to help
him. Hope when Anna commands them
to help her, thereby freeing themselves. Fear when they seem loyal to DJ
and hesitate. Hope when girls go into action and surround DJ, and Anna
hits him on the head with a rock.
When he moans, fear that he’ll come to. Hope when Anna injects him with his own
strong drug. Fear that they can’t find way out. Hope when Anna says she
dropped luminescent beads that they can follow out. Hope that she and Jim
will get together when she confesses that she did that because she wanted
to spend more time with Jim.
Resolution: Hope that Drug manufacturing operation
ends. Hope that Teens and Anna are free. Hope that Jim has fulfilled his
mission. Hope as Jim and Anna look for the luminescent beads. Fear when they don’t see any. Hope when Anna finally finds the path of
luminescence and they begin the walk to the mouth of the bunker.5. Post your assignment in the forums at https://www.screenwritingclasses.com/forums/
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Julie’s structure
What I learned doing this assignment is: the importance of keeping the Contained guidelines in mind as I write.
1. Tell us the following:
Concept:
DJ plans to infiltrate Europe with new, lethal drug, starting with
Switzerland.
Main Conflict: DJ and Anna, daughter who is desperate
to leave his drug-selling cult.2. Fill in each of these with the answers you have right now.
Act 1:
Opening:
DJ leads illegal Rave inside Swiss mountain bunker.
Inciting Incident: Jim, American DEA agent, tries to arrest
DJ for selling drugs to teens during Rave.
Turning Point: DJ escapes. Anna sells new
drug to Jim, thinking he’s the way out of her life. Anna and Jim are
attracted to each other and get lost in bunker while flirting.Act 2:
New plan: To search for way out of Bunker.
Plan in action: They start to fall for each other and
enjoy wandering together. DJ follows them and terrifies them.
Midpoint Turning Point: They make love. Jim
reacts to drug.Act 3:
Rethink everything: They confess to each other their true
roles. DJ overhears.
New plan:
they hear noise and decide to follow the noise. They get more and
more lost.
Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift: They stumble upon teens manufacturing
drugs.Act 4:
Final plan: follow teens out of the bunker.
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict:
DJ arrives and is obviously the leader of the drug manufacturing
operation. Daughter is enraged and confronts
him. They battle. She wins with help from Jim.
Resolution: Drug manufacturing operation ends. Teens
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Julie delivers multiple layers!
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What I learned doing this assignment: Originally, I had too many characters. But by doing the previous lessons, I can see how that problem can be solved through using stock footage.
1. Brainstorm potential plot layers.
• Major scheme revealed: DJ sells drugs during rave
• mystery revealed: Anna is part of his cult that sells drugs.
• Thought it was one thing, but it is another: Anna is his daughter. Jim is American anti-drug DEA agent.
• Major shift in Meaning: Anna and Jim fall for each other.
• Hidden history: DJ is wanted for sex crimes.
• Hidden plan: DJ uses drugs to recruit teens to his neo-Nazi cult.
2.. Brainstorm potential character layers.
• Secret identity: Jim is spy for DEA.
• Intrigue layers: Jim is sent secretly to put an end to European drug trade through Switzerland.
• Hidden relationships and conspiracies: Jim and Anna fall for each other despite working for different groups.
• Hidden Character history: Jim is international DEA agent. Anna wants to escape her father’s cult.
. Brainstorm potential location layers.
• Hidden operation: Drug manufacturing operation deep inside mountain bunker
• Deeper meaning: Plan to infiltrate Europe with drugs starting with Swiss government.
• Trap to draw prey: Through Raves.
• Unique sub-world: Neo-Nazi cult hidden inside mountain bunker.
4. Tell us about the layers you’ve chosen. Use this format with each of them:
• Surface Layer: Illegal Rave inside mountain bunker in Switzerland led by DJ, who forces his daughter Anna to sell drugs.
• Beneath That: Anna wants to escape from her father’s neo-Nazi cult and thinks American Jim is the answer, so she seduces him.
• How Revealed: Jim is international DEA agent searching for Swiss drug operation, which he discovers deep inside mountain bunker when he and Anna get lost and are looking for way out. DJ shows up and they secretly follow him to drug operation.
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Julie’s plot layers
What I learned doing this assignment: I’m still having trouble posting to forums, so I learned persistence.
1. Brainstorm potential plot layers.
• Major scheme revealed: DJ sells drugs during rave
• Mystery revealed: Anna is part of his cult that sells drugs.
• Thought it was one thing, but it is another: Anna is his daughter. Jim is anti-drug CIA agent.
• Major shift in Meaning: Anna and Jim fall for each other.
• Hidden history: DJ is wanted for sex crimes.
• Hidden plan: DJ plans to use drugs to recruit girls to his cult.
2.. Brainstorm potential character layers.
• Secret identity: Jim is spy for Cia.
• Intrigue layers: Jim is sent secretly to put an end to drug trade through Switzerland.
• Hidden relationships and conspiracies: Jim and Annal fall for each other despite working for different groups.
• Hidden Character history: Jim is CIA plant. Anna wants to escape her father’s cult.
. Brainstorm potential location layers.
• Hidden operation: Drug manufacturing operation deep inside mountain bunker
• Deeper meaning: Plan to infiltrate Europe starting with Swiss government.
• Trap to draw prey: Through Raves.
• Unique sub-world: Hidden Nazi group from WW II.
4. Tell us about the layers you’ve chosen. Use this format with each of them:
• Surface Layer: Illegal Rave inside mountain bunker in Switzerland led by DJ, who sells drugs using his daughter Anna.
• Beneath That: Anna wants to escape from his evil ways and thinks American Jim is the answer.
• How Revealed: Jim is CIA agent.
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Julie’s Great Hook
The process was interesting to me because I thought I had chosen the subject for my contained script, but in doing the assignment I came up with a better one!
What I learned from this assignment: I had a difficult time getting into the Forums, so I learned persistence, and also the value of being flexible about my ideas.
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My name is Julie Bliss Umbreit and I’m looking forward to being “Contained” with y’all.
I’ve written approximately eight scripts, some in better shape than others. I started my writing career as a journalist for the Seattle Times. I’ve been optioned and have won three first place awards in contests and placed in the top ten in in five others.
During this class I plan to get back to the discipline of writing daily, and renewing ScreenwritingU friendships.
I met my husband when we were college students working at Glacier National Park. As a bellman and waitress, we had a sweet summer romance, but didn’t reconnect until nearly 40 years later.
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Julie Bliss Umbreit, I agree to the terms of this release form.