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“What I learned doing this assignment is formatting is difficult.”

1. Write an Action scene for your project that includes each of these formatting techniques.

A. Basic Formatting Location: 5 seniors (Lee, Rose, Maurice, Larry, DeVon with driver Tasha) on Hair bus drives through SF downtown streets then into dark underground parking lot; quiet talking

B. <s>Dash or</s> Ellipsis. As the huge, burly guards walk toward them, seniors stand very still then using ju jit su knock down all the guards.

C. Sound, then Explanation Every scene has some classic hip hop music that matches the different moods. Tupac is first heard in opening in Senior community room.

D. Mixing Sluglines into Action. Seniors talk quietly about violent action they could take against Mac…then each begin to remember a variety violent, negative past memories…then they enter office and Larry says, “Sit down please Mac. We would like to talk.”

E. Stacking Action After Mac sits, they take seats around the desk & began to talk softly. Rose, in Spanish, tells how they lost Juan to accidental fentanyl overdose. Lee talks about her niece who died from fentanyl. Maurice & DeVon quietly walk in circle around the group. Sounds began softly & the air in the room seems to change colors and hallucinations began over & over.

Shock. Suddenly Mac jerks his body around in the chair. He is experiencing severe mental reactions; like he is in a drugged mental state.

Suspense. The five wait silently now as they watch Mac contort both face & body

F. Stacking Dialogue Seniors talking softly…not written yet

2. Choose images, actions, and sounds that make this scene visceral! Memories of seniors turning into hallucinations.

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Lesson 14. Kay’s Great Action Set Piece!

What I learned doing this assignment is there is always new research & news to add to story line”

1. Build in the meaning.

Pre-Action: Senior center on 18^th St., SF. A couple blocks from Mission High & Dolores Park. A few short blocks to Castro district. In community room, seniors pursue individual hobbies or play chess. Lots of topical discussions. Background music: Tupac

Action: Sad news about Juan, a popular volunteer, accidental overdose.

Post-Action: Each senior begins personal & group research (phones, laptop, newspapers, library websites, census websites) on fentanyl epidemic, discussions & developing an action board in their community room.

2. Make the Action Unique.

STEP 1: List your 9 Places For Uniqueness.

1. Senior Center, community room

2. Window overlooking street parking

3. Phone & laptop/websites visuals

4. Haircut Van interior

5. Downtown SF business tower, interiors

6. Mac Janssen Office

7. Several hallucinations

8. Split screen of divestment actions worldwide

9. Panoramic 3-D shot from Twin Peaks/Pink Triangle ending at Senior Center

STEP 2: Use Strategies For Uniqueness to elevate them.

Seniors using chess strategies to discuss actions

Seniors researching on phones & laptops

Seniors after haircuts able to perform active, strong ju jit su.

Seniors use voice, storytelling , hypnotism to create hallucinations

Create through the 9 Action Emotions.

1. Shock, sadness over Juan’s sudden death

2. Eager to share research

3. Excited with extreme research skills & sharing information

4. Surprise at ability to perform active, strong ju jit su.

5. Shocking memories of various events & hallucinations (Vietnam, sit ins, riots, assassinations, Emmett Till, gun violence)

6. Eager to fight with ju jit su

7. Overwhelmed by depth of fentanyl crisis and challenges

8. Depressed by narcissism of business leaders

9. Mentally active despite physical frailty

4. Add in more twists. Hallucinations

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Kay’s Unique Action!

What I learned doing this assignment is this is a series not just one film.”

What is unique about each of these places:

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Environment:
senior home & city highrise
Rules: Money
is important. Human life expendable
Villain: Mac
Janssen, owner of fentanyl manufacturing corporation
</div><div>

Mission: close
down fentanyl production
Struggle: frail
seniors against huge business

</div><div>

Unique
Skillset: mental capacity!

Meaning: Make
life worth living

Allies: Beauty
van, memories & past experiences

Weapon: magic
hair cut for physical ability, mental prowess

</div>

2. Brainstorm ways to make one or more of those places unique:

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A. What if
Mac poisons every visitor</div><div>

B. Take to
an extreme the team of frail elders would temporarily be subdued by poison,
but because of their past experience in the 60s & 70s with drugs they
would quickly recover.

C.
Specific to character or environment. Seniors are physically frail &
Mac & his corporation seem very very physically strong

D.
Shocking or Surprising. Mental abilities are superior to physical

E. Go opposite.
Each person on team has special ability/power that others did not realize
in beginning

F. What
haven’t we seen? More of backstories will come in future films

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Kay’s Level 3 Action Emotion

What I learned doing this assignment is a lot of my ideas are visual & not easy to put into words.”

Danger The group talks about alternative ways to take on Mac. They discuss very violent torture but then agree that is not their nature. Each relates memories of mental torture (from drugs, trauma, etc) and they decide to develop a mental torture to subdue Mac & force him to dissolve his fentanyl empire.

Excitement. As they relate memories & have flash backs they get excited of ways to use these mental actions.

Adrenaline.
They brainstorm & each offers unique ideas for the mental action they will
use on Mac. Each has skills that will
help. Larry will hypnotize with his voice. Maurice & DeVon will use
movement. Lee & Rose will engage

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Kay’s Level 2 Action Emotions

What I learned doing this assignment is this is a team & everyone has an important role.”

Surprise After using ju jit su on all the guards, the five enter the office of Mac Janssen. He expects them to attack him. Instead Larry says, “Sit down please Mac. We would like to talk.” After he sits, they take seats around the desk & began to talk softly. Rose, in Spanish, tells how they lost Juan to accidental fentanyl overdose. Lee talks about her niece who died from fentanyl. Maurice & DeVon quietly walk in circle around the group. Sounds began softly & the air in the room seems to change colors.

Shock. Suddenly Mac jerks his body around in the chair. He is experiencing severe mental reactions; like he is in a drugged mental state.

Suspense. The five wait silently now as they watch Mac contort both face & body.

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Kay’s Level 1 Action Emotions

“What I learned doing this assignment is look at small interactions that impact whole narrative.

Anxiety Maurice & DeVon play chess. Maurice rubs his forehead & groans. Then he has a series of flashbacks of Vietnam both battle action & drug use in town.

Fear Maurice struggles to stop the flashback, including hitting his head. The images grow more intense & louder.

Relief DeVon talks softly to Maurice, in a quiet, soothing voice. “Hey man, we can use your visions.” He ask Maurice to describe what he is seeing & feeling & then explains how they can use the mental manipulation of Mac. Maurice slowly relaxes & becomes enthusiastic about this new idea.

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Kay’s Favorite Twists!

What I learned doing this assignment is to think about alternative action, not just physical.

Danger: Lee falls & seems unconscious after hearing news

It Just Got Worse: Lee seems to have not memory

New Threat: Others in group feel more frail & unable to physically act

Safety: Tasha talks quietly to group as she does DeVon’s hair. Her calm, careful speaking helps the group regulate their fears.

Identity Hidden: DeVon has most limited physical ability but also has mot knowledge of ju jit su.

Unexpected Support: Tasha is a voice of calm & assurance to everyone.

Betrayal: Nora announces that the Beauty Van can not visit any longer due to health code (lie, jealous of Tasha’s closerelationship with group)

Plan Fails: First van ride to city postponed.

Trap: Emotional let down & depression

Escape: DeVon & Maurice talk about drug use & imagination

Lost Resources: Physical abilities

New Resources: Mental manipulation (simulation of drug states)

Attack: Once Mac is restrained, the group does not use physical force but bombards him with mental manipulation images, sounds & smells

Unexpected Weapon: Simulation of drug mental states

Surprising Response: Mac is conquered & dissolves fentanyl empire

Surprising Alliance: Group memories of drug use at various times in life

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#8. Kay’s Likability/Empathy/Justification

“What I learned doing this assignment is that Lee is essential catalyst for team”

LIKABILITY/LOVABILITY for Lee

A. Lee is
favorite of many people both work & socially & well respected
professionally.
B. Lee
loves her rescue dog Phoebe (& she loves learning new things, then sharing
with others)
C. Lee is trying to take action on social
issues.
D. She
adopted Phoebe who was an injured dog that was scheduled to be put down.
E. Lee
has sarcastic & witty sense of
humor.
F. Lee leads
with kindness.
G. Lee is physically
frail but is determined to help change social issues.

EMPATHY / DISTRESS

A. Lee
became very sick, suffers from impaired vision & difficult mobility.
B. Lee get
upset over physical inabilities
C. Drugs are
a to edged sword for health & for addiction.
D. Moral
dilemmas: how to change without violence & money.
E. Lee
would never harm someone physically even if attacked.
F. <s>Wound
attacked</s>.

JUSTIFICATION

A. Generations
of family members have had a variety of addictions, worst was alcohol
until heroin & fentanyl.

· B. <s>Threatened by others</s>.

· C. <s>The Hero is the victim of attacks</s>.

· D. Lee has suffered a major loss when friend died of fentanyl.

· E. The Villain heartlessly seeks wealth over human life.

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#7 Kay’s Story Map

“What I learned doing this assignment is need more research & not sure I understood M, A & V.”

M 1 Inciting Incident A nurse/aide rushes in gulping & crying. Everyone looks up & Lee says, “What’s wrong Nora?” Nora cries then stammers, “Juan is dead!” Everyone talks at once.

Flash back to Juan’s weekly visits, bringing plants & snacks; helping each senior, playing chess.

Nora says, “They found him in his car. They thought he was asleep but now they think it was fentanyl poison.”

M 2 V 1 A 1Rose, DeVon & Maurice are on computers searching for information about Mac Janssen owner of company that produces, markets & sells fentanyl. M 1 A 2 Lee is getting her hair done in the “Hair Van” & making talking with Tasha the hairdresser, “We need a ride next week.

M 3 A 3 Larry’s son is having a BBQ. I promise we’ll save you a plate!!” Larry on phone, “Look I just want to borrow your van for a couple hours. Hey I’ll get it washed (warshed) & fill tank. Ok, Ok I’ll bring back some MZ Kettle BBQ for everyone!”

M 4 Rose, DeVon & Maurice discuss death of Juan & fentanyl crisis in general. Lee says one of her cousin died from overdose, too.

A 4 Everyone does a few ju jit su moves then gets in Hair Van & starts to discuss/outline best plans for approaching Mac Janssen at headquarters.

A 3 V 2 Each senior points out different skills & obstacles as they drive into San Francisco.

V 3 first they can’t’ find parking. Finally as they approach & enter the headquarters, everything starts to close down.

V 4 Several paramilitary guards come out of the elevator to headquarters.

A 4 V 5 Lee is sure they need to act NOW because Mac Janssen will be headed back East later tonight, but the guards look very intimidating compared to five frail elders as they approach each other in the center of the atrium..

A 5 V 6 M 5 Five seniors unexpectedly using ju jit su completely overcome the guards & tie them up with hair products. When they exit the elevator, Mac Janssen is dismissive & berating. Silently each senior uses individual skills on him & then he is forced into his chair & given directions.

M 6 V 7 Mac Janssen sends several electronic communications, divesting his shares of fentanyl empire, then he is recorded on live video declaring from now on he will fight against the lethal drug industry; this appears on variety of screens, TV shows, social media including TikTok,

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#6. Kay’s Action Structure!

“What I learned doing this assignment is I have to think of setting & individual skills=more research.”

1. Opening 5 seniors sit in a comfortable setting. Larry & Maurice are playing chess. Rose is reading. A younger man, DeVon with multiple bandaged limbs is on his phone. Lee is looking out the window & wonders out loud when the “Hair Van” will arrive.

Inciting
Incident A nurse/aide rushes in gulping & crying. Everyone looks up
& Lee says, “What’s wrong Nora?” Nora cries then stammers, “Juan is
dead!” Everyone talks at once.

Flash back to Juan’s weekly visits, bringing plants & snacks; helping each senior, playing chess.

Nora says, “They found him in his car. They thought he was asleep but now they think it was fentanyl poison.”

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First
Turning Point at end of Act 1
</div><div>

Rose, DeVon & Maurice are on computers searching
for information about Mac Janssen owner of company that produces, markets &
sells fentanyl. Lee is getting her hair done in the “Hair Van” &
talking with Tasha the hairdresser, “We need a ride next week. Larry’s son
is having a BBQ. I promise we’ll
save you a plate!!” Larry on phone, “Look I just want to borrow your van
for a couple hours. Hey I’ll get it washed (warshed) & fill tank. Ok, Ok I’ll bring back some MZ Kettle
BBQ for everyone!”

Mid-Point

Rose, DeVon & Maurice discuss death of Juan & fentanyl crisis in
general. Lee says one of her cousin died from overdose, too. Everyone does
a few ju jit su moves then gets in Hair Van & starts to discuss/outline
best plans for approaching Mac Janssen at headquarters. Each senior points
out different skills & obstacles as they drive into San Francisco.

Second
Turning Point at end of Act 2

First they can’t’ find parking. Finally as
they approach & enter the headquarters, everything starts to close
down. Several paramilitary guards come out of the elevator to
headquarters.
Crisis

Lee
is sure they need to act NOW because Mac Janssen will be headed back East
later tonight, but the guards look very intimidating compared to five
frail elders as they approach each other in the center of the atrium.

Climax

Five seniors unexpectedly using ju jit su completely overcome the guards
& tie them up with hair products.
When they exit the elevator, Mac Janssen is dismissive & berating. Silently each senior uses individual skills
on him & then he is forced into his chair & given directions.

Resolution

Mac Janssen sends several electronic communications, divesting his shares
of fentanyl empire, then he is recorded on live video declaring from now on
he will fight against the lethal drug industry; this appears on variety of
screens, TV shows, social media including TikToK

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#5 Kay’s Action Track!

“What I learned doing this assignment is this is a great exercise to help visualize the story.”

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A.
Considering the concept from Lesson 1, what action could naturally show up
in this movie? Dangerous situation, competition, interrogation, mental torture,
fight (ju jit su), chase/pursuit, escape/evade, rescue
</div><div>

B.
Considering the Mission and Villain Tracks, what action could work for
this track?

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Mission track: Dangerous situation, competition

Villain track: fight (ju jit su), interrogation, mental torture, chase/pursuit, escape/evade, rescue

C. How can
the action start well, build in the 2nd Act, and escalate to a climax in
the 3rd Act?

Frail senior, personally impacted by fentanyl death, research worldwide problem & develop plan to stop Mac Janssen corporate head of fentanyl industry. They compete to develop workable plans, analyzing danger & optimal outcomes. With magic haircuts, develop ju jit su skills & enter Janssen headquarters, overcoming numerous guards with ju jit su expertise.

2^nd act Mac Janssen laughs off & ridicules seniors. They use mental & verbal interrogation to eventually subjugate him. As it looks like he is going to cooperate, he notifies government allies & more guards enter & attack seniors. Chase cars, airplanes, helicopters, escape and turn back to accost Mac again & finally force him to destroy worldwide drug production.

2. Select the types of action you’ll use.

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A.
Chase/Pursuit
B. Fight
D. Rescue
E.
Escape/Evade
F.
Competition
G.
Dangerous Situations
H.
Interrogation
I. Torture
(mental)

3.
Sequence the action scenes to deliver your story.
</div><div>

List of action
scenes and the purpose of each scene. Act 1: Dangerous situation, competition Act 2: fight (ju jit su), interrogation, mental
torture. Act 3: fight, chase/pursuit, escape/evade, rescue

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#4. Kay’s Villain Track!

“What I learned doing this assignment is villain Mac Janssen does not seem to have clear backstory/family/close friends?”

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A. What
might be the Villain’s plan to accomplish an evil outcome or to annihilate
the hero? Mac uses the judiciary system to control his power to produce
& distribute lethal drugs. He
has vast legal teams constantly organizing law tactics to support drug
production & profits.
B. How
many ways can the Villain attack or destroy the hero? Mac can have security
teams physically stop & abuse elders in various ways. His legal force constantly works on
attacking civilians with many court cases, police arrests, etc.
</div><div>

C. What
advantage does the Villain have and how can they exploit that in this
movie? Mac has unlimited financial resources, powerful allies in government
both nationally & internationally & he has no empathy or feelings
for anyone or anything except “power” & money

D.
What would be a “fitting end” for this Villain where they pay for what they’ve
done? Die slowly from drug overdose (not quick fentanyl)

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#3. Subject line: Lee’s Hero’s Mission Track

“What I learned doing this assignment is I have a lot of backstory for hero & villain?” .

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A. What is it
about this Hero that will have them go straight into the face of the
overwhelming odds? Lee talks with other seniors/sick folks about real life
issues. They research & talk about impossible changes for good. They
have intellectual powers & magic haircuts give the physical powers.
</div><div>

B. What is the
mission that would be an impossible goal? Stop corporate greed in
producing fentanyl

C. What strong
internal and external motivation could drive the hero? Personal & family
trauma of drug use & death

D. Imagine that
mission playing out across a story. What could naturally happen if this
hero went on this mission against this villain? Hero locked up in jail.

</div>

Clear Mission:

<div>
Motivation: stop
rampant availability of deadly drug from corporations
Inciting
Incident: accidental death of young relative; always visiting &
helping at senior home; found dead one morning in car accidental overdose.
</div><div>

First Action: research
& find corporate boss
Obstacle:
difficult to access information
Escalation: all 5
use various research skills to find corporate head

Overwhelming
Odds: layers of legal & physical obstacles

New Plan: strategize
with magic ju jit su powers after weekly hair care from magical hair van
Full out Attack:
all 5 enter headquarters; ju it su all guards & enter head office suite;
use variety of techniques to change head guy(s) including hypnotism

Success:
fentanyl manufacturing destroyed/outlawed/jail for corporate for murder

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#2 Subject line Lee vs. MacNeel Lab chairman

“What I learned doing this assignment is expand ideas about villain ?”

Concept:

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Hero Morally
Right: eliminate source of fatal drug</div><div>

Villain Morally
Wrong: profit from fatal drug

</div>

Hero

<div>
A. Unique Skill
Set ju jit su
</div><div>

B. Motivation
family member died from fentanyl

</div><div>

C. Secret or
Wound used drugs in youth & best friend died

</div>

Villain

<div>
A. Unbeatable
huge corporate with unlimited funds
</div><div>

B. Plan/Goal
make billions on drug production in China & Tasmania

C. What they
lose if Hero survives court cases

</div>

Impossible Mission

<div>
A. Puts Hero in
Action find corporate person behind the drug
</div><div>

B. Demands They
Go Beyond Their Best: physical & mental excess

C. Destroy the
Villain without killing?

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Concept: Impossible

Conventions

<div>
Heroes: 5 frail
seniors
</div><div>

Demand For
Action: fentanyl killing family members

Mission: destroy
Johnson & Johnson companies that manufacture fentanyl

Antagonist:
corporate opioid manufacturing & government supporters

Escalating
Action: research then discussion actions; then thru ju jitsu tranformations change the company
culture!!!

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“What I learned doing this assignment is thinking of the big picture & focusing on concept

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Hi I’m KE & I’ve written 3-4 scripts. I hope to write a billion dollar blockbuster!! I’m left handed which is special & unique in this crazy right handed world!!

Stay safe!!

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