Lynn Lynn Heggen
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Hi. I have written 2 scripts and am working on my 3rd. I am excited to meet everyone in this class.
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I agree to the terms in this release form. LYNN HEGGEN
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Lynn Heggen
What I’ve learned is that using these interest techniques is a fabulous way to improve every scene – every scene counts!
SCENE LOGLINE: Byrdie reveals part of herself to Ben as Ben realizes that the bet is going to cause harm – as predicted by Mark years ago.
ESSENCE: Ben has feelings of attraction to Byrdie. Byrdie has feelings of trust towards someone we know is not trustworthy.
INTEREST TECHNIQUES: Suspense and Uncertainty – Hope/Fear
EXT. FRONT PARKING LOT OF DESERT BOTANICAL GARDEN – THAT NIGHT
Hundreds of glowing luminaries line the walkways and building. Ben glides into a parking space in his red Porsche convertible with the top down and exits.
Byrdie pulls in beside him driving an old VW Bug. She exits. She wears a gorgeous red sweater dress. Ben is taken aback.
BEN: Hey there, Champ. You look…beautiful.
Byrdie stops abruptly.
BEN: You okay?
BYRDIE: Yes…I just…haven’t been called that in a long time. Someone special to me used to call me that.
BEN: Beautiful?
BYRDIE: No…
BEN: Oh, Champ? Is that okay?
BYRDIE: It’s…okay. You’re my coach now…for the next three weeks anyway.
BEN: Right.
BYRDIE: Ben.
BEN: Yeah?
BYRDIE: You calling me that…Champ…it touched my heart and it lets me know that you’re someone I can absolutely trust. It brings back such a deep childhood memory.
Ben freezes. His head drops. He momentarily closes his eyes.
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Lynn Heggen Profiles People
What I have learned is to dig deep into each character and to learn their traits as a fully developed person. Each person has a light and a dark side. Learning the traits of my characters can elevate my writing.
PERSON 1
Insecure
Bully
Victim
Compulsive
PERSON 2
Narcissist
Entitled
Insecure
Tone Deaf
Loving
PERSON 3
Enthusiastic
Wise
Giving
Insecure
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Lynn Heggen Puts Essence to Work
What I learned is…Always put essence first. Look for the essence of each scene.
Script I choose: A Birdie Christmas
Scene 1 Location: EXT. OUTSIDE LADIES’ RESTROOM OF PUBLIC GOLF COURSE – CONTINUOUS
Logline: We meet Byrdie’s father and see that they are not wealthy.
Essence I’ve discovered: Also show the relationship and quirkiness between the two bonded father/daughter duo
New Logline: A warm scene between father and daughter which highlights their love of golf and each other
Scene 2 Location: EXT. PUBLIC DRIVING RANGE – CONTINUOUS
Logline: Bond between father and daughter as student and teacher.
Essence I’ve discovered: Byrdie’s father instill’s in her at a young age that she is a winner and will be great some day.
New Logline: Encouraged by her father, Byrdie soaks up his encouragement and his promise that she will be great some day.
Scene 3 Location: EXT. JACKRABBIT GOLF CLUB DRIVING RANGE – CONTINUOUS
Logline: Ben, John and Tom are boys who bet and wise Mark counsels them.
Essence I discovered: Wise and patient golf pro teaches the young boys who place bets that someday these bets will catch up with them and they will regret the outcome.
New Logline: Golf pro teaches young boys that actions have consequences and to be respectful.
Scene 4 Location: INT. BYRDIE’S AND NORA’S APARTMENT LIVING ROOM/KITCHEN – SUNDAY AFTERNOON
Logline: Byrdie makes an intention concerning an upcoming golf tournament.
Essence I discovered: Byrdie is setting an intention to come up with the money for the tournament because if she wins, she could finance her dream of playing on the pro circuit.
New Logline: Realizing that her chances of financing her run for playing professional golf are waning, Byrdie turns to prayer and her father to come up with the money that is needed.
Scene 5 Location: EXT. FRONT OF DESERT BOTANICAL GARDEN – THAT NIGHT
Logline: Ben is taken aback by Byrdie’s appearance and calls her Champ.
Essence I discovered: This scene is pivotal because Ben is seeing Byrdie as an attractive woman but Byrdie sees him as a chance to win a tournament and follow her dream.
New Logline: Byrdie tells Ben that she knows she can trust him, even though Ben realizes that the girl he is now attracted to doesn’t know his offer to play with her in the pro-am is based on a bet.
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Lynn Heggen Finds the Essence
What I learned is to explore the essence of each character’s personality and consistently express the essence of what makes each of them tick.
Script I choose: Tin Cup
Scene 1 Location: EXT. WINNEBAGO – DAY
Logline: Tin Cup is humiliated to accept a caddie position from his nemesis.
Essence: Tin Cup does not worship money or success.
Scene 2 Location: INT. BACK ROOM – NIGHT
Logline: Sometimes par is good enough to win.
Essence: When a defining moment comes along, Tin Cup will rise to the moment. He will not shrink from it.
Scene 3 Location: INT. MOLLY’S OFFICE – FEW BEATS LATER – DAY
Logline: Tin Cup learns he must apply the risks he takes on the golf course to life.
Essence: Tin Cup is wrestling with his inner demon of why he always has to rise to a challenge.
Scene 4 Location: EXT. EIGHTEENTH FAIRWAY – DAY
Logline: Tin Cup blows the tournament when he continues to take the same unwise bad golf shot over and over.
Essence: Tin Cup will do anything to prove a point – even to his own detriment.
Scene 5 Location: EXT. DRIVING RANGE – NIGHT
Logline: Tin Cup and Molly must comes to terms with their future plans.
Essence: Tin Cup has changed. He acknowledges that there is a time in life to play it safe and to have some discipline and self-control. Molly learns that she is capable of taking a risk.
My selection for most profound essence:
EXT. COTTONWOOD LOCAL QUALIFIER – TENTH TEE – DAY
Tin Cup’s in a zone, talking to himself, full of himself, in a fabulous, indomitable state of mind.
Molly and Romeo keep looking at each other and shrugging, Tin Cup’s on a roll and needs no help. So far…
A couple of the regulars shout out encouragement.
CLINT/EARL: You the man, Tin Cup! You the man!
ROMEO: They bugging you, boss – I can shut ’em up?
TIN CUP: The way I’m swinging today, nothing bugs me – except insufficient applause.
(surveys the fairway) Gimme the lumber.
But Romeo is handing him a two iron.
ROMEO: I think two iron’s safer.
TIN CUP: I said I want the Big Dog.
Romeo looks warily down the fairway of a tight dogleg left par five.
ROMEO: Tight par five, out of bounds left…you don’t want to hit driver.
TIN CUP: I’m not going left of those trees. I’m going over those trees…with a little draw. That way I get home in two. That way I’m putting for eagle.
ROMEO: You don’t need eagle to qualify! You need to get used to playing smart – not mistakes wins the Open.
TIN CUP: Qualify? I want the course record! Now gimme the lumber!
Tin Cup reaches for the driver. Romeo shifts the golf bag beyond Tin Cup’s reach.
ROMEO: You not going to listen to me? You don’t care I’m trying to help? You think I’m full of shit?
TIN CUP: I think I’m gonna get penalized for slow play if you don’t give me that fucking driver.
ROMEO: You a head case, boss, always were, always will be.
TIN CUP: Then let’s ask the head doctor. Dr. Griswold? (to Molly) Dr. Griswold, should I hit the Big Dog or the two?
Suddenly an OFFICIAL steps forward.
P.G.A. OFFICIAL: Soliciting shot selection advice is a two-stroke penalty.
MOLLY: Trust your feelings, Roy.
TIN CUP: (To Romeo) Ha! Gimme the driver and shut up.
Romeo pulls out the driver and he snaps it in half over his knee. He tosses the two halves on the ground near Tin Cup.
ROMEO: …Go ahead. Hit the driver.
Tin Cup looks at the two halves of his driver, curbing his anger, not giving Romeo the satisfaction of a reaction.
TIN CUP: I changed my mind. Gimme the three wood.
ROMEO: You can’t clear the dogleg with a three wood.
TIN CUP: Wanna bet?
Romeo pulls out the three wood, snaps it over his knee, and tosses the halves on the ground next to the driver haves. Tin Cup turns with amusement to his playing partners, lest they think management has lost the upper hand with labor.
TIN CUP: Guess I’m going with the safe shot, boys.
Tin Cup reaches for the two iron, studies it a moment, frowns, and then:
He snaps it over his knee. He dumps these halves on the ground with the halves of the driver and three wood.
Romeo stares, aghast. Tin Cup merely shrugs.
TIN CUP: Sometime I fan that two iron. Better gimme the three.
Romeo warily hands Tin Cup the three iron. Tin Cup looks at it, frowns, then:
He snaps it over his knee and tosses it on the ground.
Molly leans over to the regulars.
MOLLY: Is this normal behavior for him?
EARL: The word ‘normal’ and him don’t collide in the same sentence too often.
She watches in amazement as —
TIN CUP: Sometimes I catch that three a little thin…
He drops the three iron halves with the other halves, and steps past Romeo and sequentially yanks all but the seven iron from his bag.
He snaps them over his knee, one by one, citing the crimes of each club with mounting absurdity and ire.
TIN CUP: And I’ve hooked my four iron…(snap)…and hit flyers with the five…(snap)…and shanked the six…(snap)…and skulled the eight…(snap)…and fatted the nine…(snap)…and chili-dipped the wedge…(snap)…and bladed the sand wedge…(snap; the pauses to reflect contemptuously on his putter)…and then there’s Mister Three-putt…
He snaps the putter in half and dumps it in the pile of broken clubs at his feet.
Then, he reaches for the last club in his bag, the seven iron. The regulars hold their breath, thinking this is the end of Tin Cup’s Open bid. But…
Tin Cup smiles and caresses the seven iron affectionately.
TIN CUP But the seven iron, I never miss the seven iron. It’s the only truly safe club in my bag.
He moves to the tee, drops a ball, and hits it down the middle with the seven iron.
TIN CUP: You happy, Romeo?
ROMEO: No boss, I’m tired…my life’s too short to spend it watching you fall apart. I done it too many times.
Romeo turns and starts walking away.
TIN CUP: What’s this? You’re quitting? First sign of adversity, you’re quitting? (as Romeo continues) Anyone want to bet me I can’t par in with a seven iron? (to Molly) Doc? Take the bet?
MOLLY: Roy–just shut up and hit the ball.
This essence is that Tin Cup cannot stop under any circumstances, even when he is hurting himself, control himself or manage his emotions.
I believe this is the essence because this fabulous scene of Tin Cup breaking every club in his bag but the seven iron even while he is desperate for the winnings and to qualify for the opening, against the advice of his long time friend and caddie, shows how he cannot reel himself in once his emotions get out of control.
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Hi everyone.
I’m Lynn Heggen.
I’ve written one screenplay and am currently working on two more. I have taken classes from Hal before and they are always educational and helpful.
I am looking forward to adding some complexity to my screenplays.
Something unique about me is that I am obsessed with golf. Love it.
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Lynn Heggen
I agree to the terms of this release form.
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What I learned is that Linked In is a great vehicle to get credibility and exposure.
My plan – I am a brand new writer so I am learning from all of you and taking notes. All of this information is invaluable.
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What I learned doing this assignment is: You must dig deeper and keep exploring your profound truth and other areas of your screenplay.
Three Decisions:
The Profound Truth: The spirit of Christmas brings love and joy to any age.
The Change for the Audience: Love can overcome any obstacles. Want to fall in love.
Entertainment Vehicle: Special Event – Road Trip – Business
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I, Lynn Heggen, agree to the terms of this release form.
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Lynn Heggen’s Analysis of Groundhog Day:
1. What is the transformational journey?
The change is from egotistical and narcissistic to compassionate and loving. From not caring to caring. From evil to good.
2. Who is the Change Agent?
Rita is the change agent. She is naturally good, caring, compassionate, fun-loving and optimistic. She teaches Phil these characteristics by living them.
The transformable character is Phil. Phil is egotistical and sarcastic. He loves only himself and doesn’t care about others. He is self-absorbed.
The oppression is the clock. He has to live the same day over and over again in a time loop until he gets it right.
3. What causes us to connect with this story?
We all make mistakes at times and would love a chance to learn from our mistakes and have a do-over.
4. Old ways to New ways:
Narcissistic and arrogant – glass half-empty – diva – only cares about himself to
Helping other people – interested in others – understanding others – caring – compassionate
5. What is the gradient change?
a. arrogant
b. tries to do things to benefit himself
c tries to seduce Rita just by memorizing facts
d. begins to do things for others
e. begins to become really interested in others’ lives
f. others brag on him in front of Rita
g. he loves Rita and Rita loves him
6. How is the old way challenged?
Phil only looked out for himself. Rita tells him is she had a chance to relive days that she would try and make herself better.
7. Profound moments in movie:
a Discovers no consequences will happen.
b. Hears that he is a glass half-full kind of guy by a drunk
c. Tries to commit suicide several times
d. Realizes people around him are very nice people
e. Tries to help people like homeless man and insurance agent and changing tire
f. Genuinely cares for others
g. Rita falls in love with him.
h. Rita is in bed with him because he has transformed and become a caring, compassionate, genuine person.
8. What are the most profound lines of the movie?
Rita states, “If I had the chance to live my days over, I would try and become a better person.”
He asks others, “What can I do for you?”
9. How does the ending payoff the setups of this movie?
He becomes a much happier person that genuinely cares about people other than himself and finds friendship with others and love with Rita. He becomes fulfilled.
10. What is the profound truth of this movie?
Look for the good in others. Be understanding, dig deep, build relationships and be honest. Appreciate the little, good things about people and accept people as they are. Rita falls in love with Phil. If you care for others, they will care for you.
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I agree to the terms of this release form. Lynn
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Hi everyone,
I am Lynn (she). I am currently working on one screenplay. Something unusual about myself is that I absolutely love to learn new things. I hope to get out of this class everything I can about writing a screenplay, plus writing in general. I look forward to meeting everyone.
Lynn
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Hi! I am Lynn (she). I am currently working on one script and one memoir. Something unique about myself is that I just finished treatments for metastatic breast cancer. I hope to get out of this group knowledge, encouragement and community.
Lynn