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Mark Hammond’s Session 8 Add Theme and Antagonist’s Journey
What I learned doing this assignment is: that I had the structure but no theme – with the theme is a better roadmap to follow.
Pass 1
Organize your Structure and Transformational Events:
Opening:
INT. BASEMENT – DAY
Antagonist:
The antagonist and a woman is taking empty specimen jars out of a box and placing them on a shelf in the basement.
EXT. IN FRONT OF AN OLD SPOOKY LOOKING HOUSE – DAY
The manager excepts the keys and pays the real estate agent out of a bag that’s labeled payroll.
TE !:
Inside the crew is celebrating they have a location to shoot their video and even state they didn’t think he could do it.
INCITING INCIDENT:
While verbally abusing the handyman setting up the lights and sound system.
The antagonist points to the handyman and electrical box,
causing him to trip the electrical system, locking all of the doors and shutters with riot gates. They are now locked in a strange house with the serial killer.
TE 2:
The lead singer joins in on the abuse, telling the handyman to hurry up and get it fixed.
TE 3:
The antagonist suddenly appears in front of the lead singer while he’s walking around in the house.
TE 4:
The manger discovers the lead singer is mysteriously missing.
He tells everyone it’s an All-Hallows Eve prank.
TE 5:
The producer tells the crew Time is critical, so he gets the crew working and tries to figure out if he needs someone to take the lead singer’s place.
ACT 2:
Placeholder: the sound of horrible screams
TE I
We see the antagonist, pull out the lead singer’s heart with his hands with a look of admiration.
TE 2
He postpones filming and tries to find the lead singer
TE 3
He asks them to try to open the doors and windows but they can’t
TE 4
He searches for the missing lead singer to no avail.
TE 5
He has everyone attempt to call the lead singer with their cell phones, but there are no signals.
Midpoint Turning Point:
A silhouette of the antagonist can be seen walking away.
The lead singer is found dead… mutilated, and he suspects the handy man is the killer.
The manager reaffirms that he did see someone else in the house.
The manager realizes this is real, and takes on a leadership role.
The producer implies…The show must go on… and the lead singer would want them to complete the video.
Act 3:
TE 1
The manager makes a bold stance and takes charge.
He orders everyone to find some sort of a weapon
TE 2
He teaches the crew how to use their weapons in a defensive mode; because he’s never been on the offense in his entire life.
he tells the crew if he could he would hire some armed security so they could get the video made without interruptions
TE 3
The antagonist appears as a black cat and watches the train how they will kill him.
TE 4
The crew member reaches down to pet the cat while agreeing as long as it doesn’t come out of his pay.
TE 5
The cat turns into a man dressed in a black tuxedo and snatches the crew members heart out.
TE 6.
The manager watches as another member of his crew is brutally murdered,
and he did little to prevent it.
Act 4:
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
The manager musters up his courage, and volunteers to face the serial killer all alone.
TE 2
He surrenders his cowardly self to the serial killer, to lure him in close. He knows the killer underestimates him and will oblige.
TE 3
The antagonist shows up as a pretty woman, dressed in a white evening gown. She looks like the real estate agent.
Placeholder: she tries to entice him to come with her.
TE 3
When the killer gets close, he’s surprised that the manager leaps up to attack him.
TE 4
The manager is putting up a ferocious fight, but he’s losing.
TE 5
He is surprised when the crew springs in to action and helps kill the serial killer.
Placeholder:
Resolution:
The manager gets the respect and honor he was seeking. The love of his life and the video produced.
*** He confesses, makes restitution, makes a successful rap video and is no longer a coward, fraud and loser.
***(He makes good on his word.)***
PASS 2: Add Slug Lines: and PASS 3 PLACEHOLDERS
EXT. IN OF A OLD SPOOKY LOOKING HOUSE – Day
OPENING: The manager excepts the keys for the house from a shady looking real estate agent. He gives him money out of a pouch that’s labeled PAYROLL..
NT. PARLOR OF THE OLD SPOOKY HOUSE – DAY
TE !:
Inside the crew is celebrating they have a location to shoot their video and even state they didn’t think he could do it.
INCITING INCIDENT:
While verbally abusing the handyman setting up the lights and sound system. causing him to trip the electrical system, locking all of the doors and shutters with riot gates. They are now locked in a strange house with the serial killer.
PLACEHOLDER: I fear reactions from the producer and crew.
TE 2:
The manger discovers the lead singer is mysteriously missing.
He tells everyone it’s an All-Hallows Eve prank.
TE 3:
Time is critical, so he gets the crew working and tries to figure out if he needs someone to take the lead singer’s place.
TE 4
He belittles his staff to get them to hurry up, and then discovers that there is someone else on the premises.
TE 5
(He regrets that his crew member was killed and takes responsibility for it.
ACT 2
INT. ROOMS AND CLOSETS IN THE HOUSE – NIGHT
The producer is addressing the crew hiding his deep concern.
TE 1
He postpones filming and tries to find the lead singer by searching every room and closet In the house.
TE 2
He asks them to try to open the doors and windows but they can’t. They are trapped .
TE 3
He has everyone attempt to call the lead singer with their cell phones, but there are no signals.
Midpoint Turning Point:
INT. A DUSTY ATTIC WITH OLD PICES OF FURNITURE – NIGHT
The lead singer is found dead… mutilated. The crew looks on terrified.
PLACEHOLDER: show shock and terror
TE 4
The manager suspects the handy man is the killer.
TE 5
The manager reaffirms that he did see someone else in the house.
The manager realizes this is real, and he has to take on a leadership role.
TE 6
New plan:
Find a way out. The manager has to plan a way out and keep the group together and find the killer before he kills someone else in the group.
ACT 3
New plan:
Find a way out. The manager has to plan a way out and keep the group together and find the killer before he kills someone else in the group.
He tries to solve the killer problem on his own but he is unable to.
(He realizes that he can’t do it all and that he needs help to succeed.)
He realizes that he will need his team’s help to (A) survive and ( B ) make the video so he stops treating them as subordinates.
(He doesn’t give up or run away from his dilemma as a loser would.)
TE 1
Rethink everything:
The manager makes a bold stance and takes charge.
He orders everyone to find some sort of a weapon
New plan:
INT. LARGE LIVING ROOM – NIGHT
He teaches the crew how to use their weapons in a defensive mode; because he’s never been on the offense in his entire life.
PLACEHOLDER: series of shots illustrating the training of the use of weapons.
Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift
INT. DINING ROOM WITH A 12 FOOT LONG DINING TABLE – NIGHT
The manager watches as another member of his crew is brutally murdered,
and he did little to prevent it.
PLACEHOLDER: reaction from the producer and crew.
TE 1
He realizes his plan does not work. Defense is not the way to kill this serial killer.
TE 2
The manager is really feeling like a coward-that it his fault they followed him someone that really doesn’t know what he’s doing, and it caused the death of their friends.
TE 3
He comes up with a new plan that includes the others to kill the killer.
TE 4
He becomes a courageous leader in his heart and is bubbling over with newfound confidence.
Act 4:
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
TE 1
The manager musters up his courage, and volunteers to face the serial killer all alone.
INT. DINING ROOM – NIGHT
He surrenders his cowardly self to the serial killer, to lure him in close. He knows the killer underestimates him and will oblige.
PLACEHOLDER: I need to put in the reaction of the killer.
TE 1
When the killer gets close, he’s surprised that the manager leaps up to attack him. The manager is putting up a ferocious fight, but he’s losing.
PLACEHOLDER: choreograph a fight sequence between the producer and the killer
TE 2
He is surprised when the crew springs in to action and helps kill the serial killer.
TE 3
Resolution:
The manager gets the respect and honor he was seeking.
The love of his life and the video produced.
TE 4
He confesses, makes restitution,
TE 5
makes a successful rap video and is no longer a coward, fraud and loser.
TE 6
(He makes good on his word.)
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Mark Hammond”s High Speed Beat Sheet
What I learned doing this assignment is: I learned personally, can get more accomplished if I don’t try to make it perfect on the first draft.
Pass 1
Organize your Structure and Transformational Events:
Opening:
EXT. IN FRONT OF AN OLD SPOOKY LOOKING HOUSE – DAY
The manager excepts the keys and pays the real estate agent out of a bag that’s labeled payroll.
TE !:
Inside the crew is celebrating they have a location to shoot their video and even state they didn’t think he could do it.
INCITING INCIDENT:
While verbally abusing the handyman setting up the lights and sound system. causing him to trip the electrical system, locking all of the doors and shutters with riot gates. They are now locked in a strange house with the serial killer.
TE 2:
The manger discovers the lead singer is mysteriously missing.
He tells everyone it’s an All-Hallows Eve prank.
TE 3:
Time is critical, so he gets the crew working and tries to figure out if he needs someone to take the lead singer’s place.
ACT 2:
TE !
He postpones filming and tries to find the lead singer
TE 2
He asks them to try to open the doors and windows but they can’t
TE 3
He searches for the missing lead singer to no avail.
TE 4
He has everyone attempt to call the lead singer with their cell phones, but there are no signals.
Midpoint Turning Point:
The lead singer is found dead… mutilated, and he suspects the handy man is the killer.
The manager reaffirms that he did see someone else in the house.
The manager realizes this is real, and takes on a leadership role.
Act 3:
TE 1
The manager makes a bold stance and takes charge.
He orders everyone to find some sort of a weapon
TE 2
He teaches the crew how to use their weapons in a defensive mode; because he’s never been on the offense in his entire life.
TE 3
The manager watches as another member of his crew is brutally murdered,
and he did little to prevent it.
Act 4:
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
The manager musters up his courage, and volunteers to face the serial killer all alone.
TE 2
He surrenders his cowardly self to the serial killer, to lure him in close. He knows the killer underestimates him and will oblige.
TE 3
When the killer gets close, he’s surprised that the manager leaps up to attack him.
TE 4
The manager is putting up a ferocious fight, but he’s losing.
TE 5
He is surprised when the crew springs in to action and helps kill the serial killer.
Resolution:
The manager gets the respect and honor he was seeking. The love of his life and the video produced.
*** He confesses, makes restitution, makes a successful rap video and is no longer a coward, fraud and loser.
***(He makes good on his word.)***
PASS 2: Add Slug Lines: and PASS 3 PLACEHOLDERS
EXT. IN OF A OLD SPOOKY LOOKING HOUSE – Day
OPENING: The manager excepts the keys for the house from a shady looking real estate agent. He gives him money out of a pouch that’s labeled PAYROLL..
NT. PARLOR OF THE OLD SPOOKY HOUSE – DAY
TE !:
Inside the crew is celebrating they have a location to shoot their video and even state they didn’t think he could do it.
INCITING INCIDENT:
While verbally abusing the handyman setting up the lights and sound system. causing him to trip the electrical system, locking all of the doors and shutters with riot gates. They are now locked in a strange house with the serial killer.
PLACEHOLDER: I fear reactions from the producer and crew.
TE 2:
The manger discovers the lead singer is mysteriously missing.
He tells everyone it’s an All-Hallows Eve prank.
TE 3:
Time is critical, so he gets the crew working and tries to figure out if he needs someone to take the lead singer’s place.
TE 4
He belittles his staff to get them to hurry up, and then discovers that there is someone else on the premises.
TE 5
(He regrets that his crew member was killed and takes responsibility for it.
ACT 2
INT. ROOMS AND CLOSETS IN THE HOUSE – NIGHT
The producer is addressing the crew hiding his deep concern.
TE 1
He postpones filming and tries to find the lead singer by searching every room and closet In the house.
TE 2
He asks them to try to open the doors and windows but they can’t. They are trapped .
TE 3
He has everyone attempt to call the lead singer with their cell phones, but there are no signals.
Midpoint Turning Point:
INT. A DUSTY ATTIC WITH OLD PICES OF FURNITURE – NIGHT
The lead singer is found dead… mutilated. The crew looks on terrified.
PLACEHOLDER: show shock and terror
TE 4
The manager suspects the handy man is the killer.
TE 5
The manager reaffirms that he did see someone else in the house.
The manager realizes this is real, and he has to take on a leadership role.
TE 6
New plan:
Find a way out. The manager has to plan a way out and keep the group together and find the killer before he kills someone else in the group.
ACT 3
New plan:
Find a way out. The manager has to plan a way out and keep the group together and find the killer before he kills someone else in the group.
He tries to solve the killer problem on his own but he is unable to.
(He realizes that he can’t do it all and that he needs help to succeed.)
He realizes that he will need his team’s help to (A) survive and ( B ) make the video so he stops treating them as subordinates.
(He doesn’t give up or run away from his dilemma as a loser would.)
TE 1
Rethink everything:
The manager makes a bold stance and takes charge.
He orders everyone to find some sort of a weapon
New plan:
INT. LARGE LIVING ROOM – NIGHT
He teaches the crew how to use their weapons in a defensive mode; because he’s never been on the offense in his entire life.
PLACEHOLDER: series of shots illustrating the training of the use of weapons.
Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift
INT. DINING ROOM WITH A 12 FOOT LONG DINING TABLE – NIGHT
The manager watches as another member of his crew is brutally murdered,
and he did little to prevent it.
PLACEHOLDER: reaction from the producer and crew.
TE 1
He realizes his plan does not work. Defense is not the way to kill this serial killer.
TE 2
The manager is really feeling like a coward-that it his fault they followed him someone that really doesn’t know what he’s doing, and it caused the death of their friends.
TE 3
He comes up with a new plan that includes the others to kills the killer.
TE 4
He becomes a courageous leader in his heart and is bubbling over with newfound confidence.
Act 4:
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
TE 1
The manager musters up his courage, and volunteers to face the serial killer all alone.
INT. DINING ROOM – NIGHT
He surrenders his cowardly self to the serial killer, to lure him in close. He knows the killer underestimates him and will oblige.
PLACEHOLDER: I need to put in the reaction of the killer.
TE 1
When the killer gets close, he’s surprised that the manager leaps up to attack him. The manager is putting up a ferocious fight, but he’s losing.
PLACEHOLDER: choreograph a fight sequence between the producer and the killer
TE 2
He is surprised when the crew springs in to action and helps kill the serial killer.
TE 3
Resolution:
The manager gets the respect and honor he was seeking.
The love of his life and the video produced.
TE 4
He confesses, makes restitution,
TE 5
makes a successful rap video and is no longer a coward, fraud and loser.
TE 6
(He makes good on his word.)
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Mark Hammond’s Transformational Events
What I learned doing this assignment is: doing this process increases your reservoir of nuggets that you can use it the script.
Act 1:
Opening :
The manager of the rap film crew is fist-bumping, nodding his head in the affirmative, pleased, and points to different locations , framing them with his hands. *** He is determined to overcome his dyslexia handicap and find a trophy girlfriend by making a rap video.***
While the crew is looking around, he hands the real estate lady a pouch for payment that reads payroll. ***He hired the crew and rents the location to shoot the video with mis-allocated funds that he plans on paying back.***
Inciting incident:
While verbally abusing the handyman setting up the lights and sound system. causing him to trip the electrical system, locking all of the doors and shutters with riot gates. They are now locked in a strange house with the serial killer.
He recognizes he’s on the killers turf, and at a geographical disadvantage. He must explore the surroundings to make a level playing field.
Turning Point:
The manger discovers the lead singer is mysteriously missing.
He doesn’t panic even though he is afraid and continues to set up for the video.
He displays an air of confidence
He tells everyone it’s an All-Hallows Eve prank.
***He belittles his staff and then discovers that there is a killer on the premises
***(He regrets that his crew member was killed and takes responsibility for it.)
Act 2:
Plan:
He postpones filming and tries to find the lead singer
Plan in action:
He searches for the missing lead singer to no avail.
He asks them to try to open the doors and windows but they can’t
He has everyone attempt to call the lead singer with their cell phones, but there are no signals.
Midpoint Turning Point:
The lead singer is found dead… mutilated, and he suspects the handy man is the killer.
The manager reaffirms that he did see someone else in the house.
The manager realizes this is real, and he has to take on a leadership role.
New plan:
Find a way out. The manager has to plan a way out and keep the group together and find the killer before he kills someone else in the group.
*** He tries to solve the killer problem on his own but he is unable to.
(He realizes that he can’t do it all and that he needs help to succeed.)***
***He realizes that he will need his team’s help to (A) survive and ( B ) make the video so he stops treating them as subordinates.
***(He doesn’t give up or run away from his dilemma as a loser would.)****
Act 3:
Rethink everything:
The manager makes a bold stance and takes charge.
He orders everyone to find some sort of a weapon
New plan:
He teaches the crew how to use their weapons in a defensive mode; because he’s never been on the offense in his entire life.
Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift
The manager watches as another member of his crew is brutally murdered,
and he did little to prevent it.
He realizes his plan does not work. Defense is not the way to kill this serial killer.
The manager is really feeling like a coward-that it his fault they followed someone that really doesn’t know what he’s doing, and it caused the death of their friends.
****He comes up with a new plan that includes the others kills the killer.
He becomes a courageous leader in his heart and is bubbling over with newfound confidence.***
Act 4:
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
The manager musters up his courage, and volunteers to face the serial killer all alone.
He surrenders his cowardly self to the serial killer, to lure him in close. He knows the killer underestimates him and will oblige.
When the killer gets close, he’s surprised that the manager leaps up to attack him. The manager is putting up a ferocious fight, but he’s losing.
He is surprised when the crew springs in to action and helps kill the serial killer.
Resolution:
The manager gets the respect and honor he was seeking. The love of his life and the video produced.
*** He confesses, makes restitution, makes a successful rap video and is no longer a coward, fraud and loser.
***(He makes good on his word.)***
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Mark Hammond’s 4 Act Transformational Structure
What I learned doing this assignment is: this format developed into a first part rough draft for script in spite of myself.
First draft of my 4 act transformational structure.
Concept:
A fraudulent rap group manager finds a location to shoot a video and discovers it is the hideout for a serial killer. He must now save himself, his crew, and get the video completed.
Main Conflict:
The manager must complete the video before the Serial killer kills him and or his crew exposes him as a fraud.
Old Ways:
Old identity: He was a dreamer with delusions of grandeur.
Fakes knowing how to make a rap video.
Overbearing to subordinates to impress his love interest.New ways:
He draws from the knowledge learned from his mistakes.
He’s now a realist and sees things as they are.
He has learned to get respect you have to give respect.Act 1:
Opening :
The manager of the rap film crew is fist-bumping, nodding his head in the affirmative pleased and points to different locations , framing them with his hands.
While the crew is looking around, he hands the real estate lady a pouch for payment that reads payroll.
Inciting incident:
While verbally abusing the handyman setting up the lights and sound system. causing him to trip the electrical system, locking all of the doors and shutters with riot gates. They are now locked in a strange house with the serial killer.
Turning Point:
The manger discovers the lead singer is mysteriously missing.
He doesn’t panic even though he is afraid and continues to set up for the video.
Everyone thinks it’s an All-Hallows Eve prank.
Act 2:
Plan:
He postpones filming and tries to find the lead singer
Plan in action:
He searches for the missing lead singer to no avail.
He asks them to try to can’t open the doors and windows but they can’t
He has everyone attempt to call the lead singer with their cell phones, but there are no signals.
Midpoint Turning Point:
The lead singer is found dead… mutilated, and he suspects handy man is the killer.
The manager reaffirms that he did see someone else in the house.
The manager realizes this is real, and he has to take on a leadership role.
New plan:
Find a way out. The manager has to plan a way out and keep the group together and find the killer before he kills someone else in the group.
Act 3:
Rethink everything:
The manager makes a bold stance and takes charge.
He orders everyone to find some sort of a weapon
New plan:
He teaches the crew how to use their weapons in a defensive mode; because he’s never been on the offense in his entire life.
Turning Point: Huge failure / Major shift
The manager watches as another member of his crew is brutally murdered,
and he did little to prevent it.
He realizes his plan does not work. Defense is not the way to kill this serial killer.
The manager is really feeling like a coward-that it his fault they followed someone that really doesn’t know what he’s doing, and it caused the death of their friends.
Act 4:
Climax/Ultimate expression of the conflict
The manager musters up his courage, and volunteers to face the serial killer all alone.
He surrenders his cowardly self to the serial killer, to lure him in close. He knows the killer underestimates him and will oblige.
When the killer gets close, he’s surprised that the manager leaps up to attack him. The manager is putting up a ferocious fight, but he’s losing.
He is surprised when the crew springs in to action and helps kill the serial killer.
Resolution:
The manager gets the respect and honor he was seeking. The love of his life and the video produced.
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Mark Hammond’s Character Interviews
What I learned doing this assignment is this process will bring your characters to life, and make it easier for you to write dialogue.
Questions For Protagonist
Tell me about yourself:
I’m a mousy, loser dreamer. I’m in my mid-twenties. I was born in Naperville Illinois and I have a degree in theatre. Now I live in Hollywood. I want to have the typical Hollywood life with a trophy wife, children and big house on the top of the hill with a Bentley. Everyone says I’m a dreamer, but I’m really a late bloomer.
Why do you think you were called to this journey? Why are you?
I think I was called to this journey because I was the only person that the protagonist would really underestimate which I could turn into my much-needed victory. I found that Win, lose or draw I could stick with it until it’s completed.
Up against the antagonist – what is it about them that makes this journey even more difficult for you?
The antagonist is a killer, fighter, and I can’t fight my way out of a wet paper bag.
What changes must be made to survive as I step outside of my box:
I will have to live in the right now. I will have to empower myself-tell myself that I can win! Grow some balls, and the most difficult will be not backing down.
What habits or ways of thinking do you think will be the most difficult to let go of?
One is always seeing myself losing before-my defeatist attitude.
What fears, insecurities, and wounds have held you back?
1. Fear of being exposed as a coward and a fraud. 2. Not secure about my ability to do the job because I don’t really have the experience in this field. I was fired back in Illinois, humiliated and labeled as a fraud in front of the girl I really loved and she dumped me.
What skills, background or expertise makes you well-suited to face this conflict or antagonist?
I always learned from my failures, which makes me very knowledgeable.
What are you hiding from the other characters? What don’t you want them to know?
I’m hiding my past failures and that I used the payroll to finance this project.
What do you think of the antagonist?
He is a cold hearted killer and I’d rather not think of him at all because he can literally taste my fear.
Tell me your side of this whole conflict/story.
I thought that I had to do all of those fraudulent things in order to be liked or respected after I found out that the people I looked up to were all frauds, I realized that all I had to do was be truthful.
What does it do for your life if you succeed here?
It will give me a new lease on life I’ll be able to see the silver lining in every cloud.
What if you fail?
Failure is not an option.
Questions For Antagonist
1. Tell me about yourself
I kill and mutilate people with no remorse. do a job no one else would do.
2. My strengths and weaknesses, having to do with this journey.
I am cold-hearted but a hard worker my job-to punish people for their shortcomings.
3. Why are you committed to making the protagonist fail? Or for a relationship movie, why are you committed to making them change?
I want to show he is not as innocent as he makes himself out to be. Making him change is for his own good.
4. What do you get out of winning this fight/succeeding in your plan/taking down your competition?
My record will stay intact. Actually the plan is their plan, I’m just the umpire.
5. What drives you towards your mission/agenda, even in the face of danger, ruin, or death?
It’s my job, and I do it with pride. Even in the face of danger, ruin, or death. I cannot allow anyone to get away with breaking the rules.
6. What secrets must you keep to succeed? What other secrets do you keep out of fear/insecurity?
My secret is, I broke the rules myself. That’s why I’m here. I fear someone will find out that I once was a murderer. I don’t want them to be seen as a hypocrite.
7. Compared to other people like you, what makes you special?
I do this, so other people won’t turn out the way I did.
8. What do you think of the protagonist?
He’s a phony, but I think he has potential.
9. Tell me your side of this whole conflict/story.
I believe that without me (death) the world would believe in nothing.
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Mark Hammond’s Character Profile Part 2
What I learned doing this assignment is stick with the process-it works.
What draws me to this character?
(Protagonist.)
Traits:
He’s a dreamer with champagne, taste and beer money. He wants to be included.
He has delusions of grandeur.
Subtext:
He over bearing with people to hide his inadequacies. He uses this to impress women.
Flaw:
He’s a coward.
Values:
Confidence, boldness, and there is always hope.
Irony:
He is head and shoulders above the people who wanted to imitate.
When everyone else ran from the killer, he attacked the serial killer.
What draws me to this character:
(Antagonist.)
Traits:
He’s a predator, gruesome, and will use any and all means necessary to get you.
Subtext:
He has a job to do. His job will ultimately help humanity.
Flaw:
He feels justified when he kills someone-no remorse.
Values:
Dedication to his job of killing people. Treats everyone equally-does’t discriminate.
Irony:
He wants to be loved. Sometimes he takes his job personally, and kills in a more gruesome manner than necessary.
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Mark Hammond
What I learned doing this assignment: the process just about writes the script for you.
Role in the story: Protagonist/Dreamer
Manager of a rap group. Wants to make it big.
Age range, and description:
Mid 20s. Average build, and height. The poster child for nerds.
Nothing seems to work out for him.
Internal Journey:
From feeling inadequate and a coward loser, to the brave leader with confidence to take on the serial killer.
External Journey:
He watches members of his crew get killed by the serial killer. He can no longer stand by and watch, so he takes on the serial killer.
Motivation:
The young lady he has feelings for, and the star of the video is fighting for her life with a serial killer. Everything is riding on the success of this video.
Wound:
He’s tired of being perceived as a loser nerd.
Mission/agenda:
Now is the time for him to manage, to be a real manager. He organizes the group with a plan to defeat the serial killer.
Secret:
He tried to set up his rival the girl of his dreams to get killed by the serial killer, Opening the door for him.
What makes him special:
He’s really not like the rest of them, power-hungry, cold, greedy, backbiting, cutthroat, and will do anything to get to the top. He is really a good man.
Role in the story:
Antagonist: Predator Posing as a handyman, in an abandon AB&B.
Age range, and description:
Male, mid 30s sharp, misunderstood serial killer. handsome with a bit of distinction.
His flip side is ugly, grotesque, with a partially charred face.
Internal Journey:
Stays constant
External Journey:
He goes from eminent death, then he returns to start a new mission.
Motivation:
It’s his job to kill evil people. This is achieved without any remorse.
Wound:
Misunderstood, and not appreciated for the job he does.
Mission/Agenda:
To make sure you are punished on this side for any wrong doing.
Secret:
He wants to be loved.
What makes them special:
This character can appear in multiple forms and cannot be killed.
Other characters that might be needed:
Rap group:
2 male
1 female
1 female, assistant, producer
1 male turntable musician
1 set designer
My genre is Horror
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Mark’s Transformational Journey
What I learned doing this assignment: Using this format will make fleshing out the rest of the script stress free.
Loglines:
An insecure rap group Project Manager scouting locations for a Halloween video, unaware, chooses a serial killer’s hideout to film in. He has to stay alive, save his crew and get the video produced.
Who is my hero? And what is their character arc that represents a transformation?
My hero is an insecure loser rap group production manager. This is his last chance to make a hit video or lose everything, including what little credibility he has left.
He transforms from a mouse to a lion. He becomes a well respected hero, studio head, and a man amongst men.
Internal Journey:
He feels unsuccessful, insecure and dejected, not good enough to attempt to produce a rap video.
His insecurities resurface when his crew starts getting killed.
He chooses to overcome his fear and faces the killer.
He surprises himself when he conquers his fear and kills the killer.
Afterwards, he sees himself as a winner – not a loser.
He is able to complete his task and make the videoExternal Journey:
1. He finds old mansion to try to produce a rap video.
2. Starts his project
3. People start getting killed.
4. Video production is threatened
5. Meets the bad guy
6. He has to kill the killer in order to shoot the video and become the hero in
7. The other important areas of life
8. He kills the killer
9. He gets the video done, big success and gets self respect and esteem
The Old Ways:
He was a coward
He never stood up for himself or to anyone
He was invisible to everyone around him
He failed in relationships
He failed in personal goals
He repeatedly failed at everything he did
The New Ways:
He’s a brave hero
He doesn’t back down from anything or anyone
Everyone wants to be around him
The girls love him and try to get his attention
He’s empowered – there’s nothing he can’t do
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Mark Hammond
I have completed six scripts.
I hope to complete at least five scripts a year.
I’m also a pastor and counselor.
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Mark Hammond
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Here’s my Lesson 2. If anyone is available to take a look, I’d really appreciate it. Thanks!
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Mark’s Basic Structure Version 1
What I’ve learned doing this assignment is breaking it down this way clearly identified the problems I was having with the script.
Logline:
Losing her site and parents in a car accident, Precious is taken care of by her brother
Larry, but on this stormy Halloween night, trapped in a funeral home, the Angel Of Death welcomed them into his world.
The Angel Of Death:
Open:
The story opens on Halloween night, where Carl arrives with a cadaver under the watchful gaze of the mortician, Angel. There’s a familiar reality to the transaction, almost friendliness. As Carl departs, the true menace of their relationship is unveiled, when the cadaver is revealed to be alive, just long enough for Angel to remove its still beating heart with monstrous, retractable claws.
One year later, a group of college friends are driving to a trick or treat themed church party. Their driver, Carl… also a college student… fits right in with the group, with no allusion to his role as Angel’s minion. The group enjoys some treats as they drive, including booze and marijuana, while joking with one another, this all seems to be one hell of a party. Among the partiers are Precious and her brother Larry, who appear to have a tense relationship due to the past trauma for which Larry blames himself, and which Precious describes as his dangerous drinking. The other members of the group are also introduced. Somewhere along the road, the bus suffers a breakdown, and the group is forced into the rainy night looking for help. They stumble through a cemetery, up to Angel’s Funeral Home.
Conflict:
Precious does not want to go to this party. She was pressured by her brother to attend.
Inciting incident:
Soon, the group is inside the funeral home, facing a myriad of surreal terrors.The horror begins with Larry encountering Angel, who greets him with a smile before showing his true face and suddenly removing Larry’s heart. The group discovers Larry, who warns them to “protect their heart” with his dying breath. The group is now locked in, and seemingly there is no way out.
Conflict:
For Precious, this moment is the beginning of her fall into guilt and despair, both over Larry’s death and the accident which left her and Larry orphaned.
By page 10, you know what the movie is about:
By now we know this is a horror/dark comedy.
First turning point at end of Act 1:
Precious is captured by Angel, who reveals he has a particular interest in her, before deciding to cremate her for her sins.
Conflict:
Precious must get free from eminent death.
Second turning point at end of Act 2:
Precious can see that over the course of the evening. Angel kills the teens one by one, and she is helpless to warn them. Angel explaining that Halloween is deaths special night, and this is no coincidence that the teens have run out of their allotted time on earth. As more of them are all picked off, the group tries to arm themselves and make a final stand, only to learn that the mortality is bound by universal faith, and the Angel of Death would not be easily defeated.
Conflict:
Precious wants to warn them but she is bound and blind.
Crisis:
In a final defiant act, Precious will try to sacrifice herself and kill The Angel Of Death, rather than fall victim to his whims. In so doing, Precious uncovers Carl’s identity as Angel’s secret servant, and was turned to her only weapon… the power of her faith. ( I will rewrite this to her brother is Angel’s accomplice.)
Conflict:
Should I kill my brother along with Angel to save myself?
Climax:
In their last confrontation, Angel claims both Carl and the final survivor, Morris, with the building now unlocked and Precious able to escape. As his final act, Angel reminds Precious that her time will come, even if it won’t be this Halloween. Precious will be forced to survive under the looming menace of deaths intentions, forever carrying with her the guilt of her family‘s death at her hand and her own physical disability.
Resolution:
Morris gives Precious the cross he described in the opening scene that was given to him by his grandmother, she told him it will remind him that no one can take his soul.
Precious straightens up with her head held high says: “My only regret is I didn’t walk with hope before now!”
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Hi Everyone,
I’m just starting this class and can someone give me feedback on the first assignment “Logline and One Page” ? Thanks in advance !
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Mark Hammond
I agree to the terms of this Release Form.
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Hi I’m Mark- I’m an author and have done a screenplay assignment. This is the 4th script I’ve finished recently. I hope to sharpen my rewriting skills to be able to complete more scripts. I’m a renaissance man that is now devoting myself to screenwriting and I look forward to working with you guys!
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***CORRECTED VERSION***
Mark’s Logline and One Page
What I’ve Learning Doing This Assignment is: How important the Logline and writing our your story in one page is. It gives you a better insight of your true story.
Log Line:
Losing her sight in a terrible car accident that claimed her mother and father, Precious and her brother Larry know how unexpectedly death can appear; but on this
stormy Halloween night, trapped in a funeral home with a group of trick or treating college friends, Precious will discover the Angel Of Death is far crueler and complicated than she could have ever feared.
The Angel Of Death:
The story opens on Halloween night, where Carl arrives with a cadaver under the watchful gaze of the mortician, Angel. There’s a familiar reality to the transaction, almost friendliness. As Carl departs, the true menace of their relationship is unveiled, when the cadaver is revealed to be alive, just long enough for Angel to remove his still beating heart with monstrous, retractable claws.
One year later, a group of college friends are driving to a trick or treat themed church party. Their driver, Carl… also a college student… fits right in with the group, with no allusion to his role as Angels minion. The group enjoys some treats as they drive, including booze and marijuana, this all seems to be one hell of a party. Amongst the partiers is Precious and her brother Larry, who appear to have a tense relationship due to the past trauma for which Larry blames himself, and which Precious describes as his dangerous drinking. The other members of the group are also introduced. Somewhere along the road, the bus suffers a breakdown, and the group of forced into the rainy night looking for help. They stumble through a cemetery, up to Angel’s Funeral Home.
Soon, the group are inside the funeral home, facing a myriad of surreal terrors.
The horror begins with Larry encountering Angel, who greets him with a smile before showing his true face and suddenly removing Larry’s heart. The group discovers Larry, who warns them to “protect their heart” with his dying breath. For Precious, this moment is the beginning of her fall into guilt and despair, both over Larry’s death and the accident which left her and Larry orphaned.
Precious is captured by Angel, who reveals he has a particular interest in her, before deciding to cremate her for her sins.
Over the course of the evening. Angel kills the teens one by one, explaining that Halloween is death’s special night, and this is no coincidence that the teens have run out of their allotted time on earth. As more of them all picked off, the group tries to arm themselves and make a final stand, only to learn that their mortality is bound by universal faith, and the Angel of Death would not be easily defeated.
In a final defiant act, Precious will try to sacrifice herself and kill The Angel Of Death, rather than fall victim to his whims. In so doing, Precious uncovers Carl’s identity as Angel’s secret servant, and she turned to her only weapon… the power of her faith.
In their last confrontation, Angel claims both Carl and the final survivor Morris, with the building now unlocked and Precious able to escape. As his final act, Angel reminds Precious that her time will come, even if it won’t be this Halloween. Precious will be forced to survive under the looming menace of Death’s intentions, forever carrying with her the guilt of her family‘s death and her own physical disability.
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Mark’s Logline and One Page
What I’ve Learning Doing This Assignment is: How important the Logline and writing out your story in one page is. It gives you a better insight of your true story.
Log Line:
Losing her sight in a terrible car accident that claimed her mother and father, Precious and her brother Larry know how unexpectedly death can appear; But on this
stormy Halloween night, trapped in a funeral home with a group of trick or treating college friends, Precious will discover the Angel Of Death is far crueler
and complicated than she could have ever feared.
The Angel Of Death:
The story opens on Halloween night, where Carl arrives with a cadaver under the watchful gaze of the mortician, Angel. There’s a familiar reality to the transaction, almost friendliness. As Carl departs, the true menace of their relationship is unveiled, when the cadaver is revealed to be alive, just long enough for Angel to remove is still beating heart with monstrous, retractable claws.
One year later, a group of college friends are driving to a trick or treat themed church party. Their drive Carl… also a college student… fits right in with the group, with no allusion to his role as Angels minion. The group enjoys some treats as they drive, including booze and marijuana, this all seems to be one hell of a party. Amongst the partiers is Precious and her brother Larry, Who appear to have a tense relationship due to the past trauma for which Larry blames himself, and which precious describes as his dangerous drinking. The other members of the group are also introduced. Somewhere along the road, the bus suffers a breakdown, and the group of forced into the rainy night looking for help. They stumble through a cemetery, up to Angel’s Funeral Home.
Soon, the group are inside the funeral home, facing a myriad of surreal terrors.
The horror begins with Larry encountering Angel, who greets him with a smile before showing his true face and suddenly removing Larry’s heart. The group discovers Larry call mom who warns them to “protect their heart” with his dying breath. For precious, this moment is the beginning of her fall into guilt and despair, both over Larry’s death and the accident which left her and Larry orphaned.
Precious is captured by Angel, who reveals he has a particular interest in her, before deciding to cremate her for her sins.
Over the course of the evening. Angel kills the teens one by one, explaining that Halloween is deaths special night, and this is no coincidence that the teens have run out of their allotted time on earth. As more of them all picked off, the group tries to arm themselves and make a final stand, only to learn that the mortality is bound by universal faith, and the angel of death would not be easily defeated.
In a final defiant act, Precious will try to sacrifice himself and kill The Angel Of Death, rather than fall victim to his whims. In so doing, Precious uncovers Carl’s identity as angels secret servant, and was turned to her only weapon… The power of her faith.
In their last confrontation, Angel claims both Carl and the final survivor Morris, with the building now unlocked and Precious able to escape. As his final act, Angel reminds precious that her time will come, even if it won’t be this Halloween. Precious will be forced to survive under the looming menace of deaths intentions, forever carrying with her the guilt of her family‘s death and her own physical disability.
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What I learned doing this assignment is: This makes the Horror plot clearer and helps develop more horrific scenes.
Mark Hammond: Horror Situation Track
ACT 1
Atmosphere of evil established:
On a howling rainy with lightning Halloween night a group of thrill-seeking young adults.
1.Horror Situation:
They see a funeral home at a distance deep in the woods.
Reaction-Escape:
They approach trying to seeking shelter from the lightning and torrential rain.
2.Horror Situation:
As they approach, they see a figure of someone they can’t quite make out, because of the rain, frantically beckoning them in. But, when they enter-no one is there but a casket.
Reaction-Solve it:
The group reacts with fear, confusion, and curiosity. Finally the leader says stay put while he investigates.
Horror Situation:
Those remaining behind try their cell phones and no one can get a signal.
Reaction-Solve it:
Those remaining look for a working landline.
Horror Situation:
Those remaining have decided to proceed together without the Leader. They come upon a room labeled “Keep Out”. They enter, and suddenly, all of the doors in the funeral home automatically lock, and steel riot shutters cover the windows.
Reaction-Escape
They panic and try to escape.
Horror Situation:
They hear noise and screaming coming from another room.
Reaction:Fight
Some become terrified as others panic, and they become at odds with each other.
ACT 2
Horror Situation:
They stop fighting. They hear another scream.
Reaction-Escape
Realizing that the doors are locked they hesitantly go towards the sound of the scream hoping someone there can help them.
Horror Situation:
The group enters a room filled with caskets. One opens and their leader sits up with a large hole in his chest.
Reaction-Denial
They look at one another in disbelief. They become paralyzed with fear.
Horror Situation:
They see the shadow of the monster on the wall coming towards them.
Reaction:Escape
The group scatters looking for hiding places.
Horror:Situation:
(Innocent one) Falls and hurts her leg.
She is captured and held captive by the monster
Reaction: Solve it
Only the rescuer follows to see what the monster is going to do with her.
ACT 3
Horror Situation:
He watches while ( INNOCENT ) is placed on a conveyor belt, that is slowly moving her into the crematory’s fiery furnace.
Reaction:Fight
She is screaming hysterically.
Horror Situation:
The monster hears the others running outside of the room. He leaves the room to capture someone else.
Reaction:Escape
The ( Rescuer ) sees ( Innocent) just about to go into the fire. He uses the opportunity to rescue her and they rejoin the others.
Horror Situation
The monster spots the remaining group and comes after them to kill them all off.
Reaction: Fight
The rescuer (LEADER) tells the group to arms themselves to fight off, and kill the monster. Everyone complies except (OUT OF CONTROL/OBNOXIOUS) and her boyfriend (THE REBEL/RULE BREAKER). They run off together to escape. The monster sees them.
Horror Situation
They OUT OF CONTROL/OBNOXIOUS) and her boyfriend (THE REBEL/RULE BREAKER) run into a room lock the door behind them only to find that the monster is in that room.
Reaction:Escape
To save herself, ( The OUT OF CONTROL / OBNOXIOUS ) CHARACTER pushes her boyfriend into the arms of the monster and the monster kills him.
Horror Situation:
( The OUT OF CONTROL / OBNOXIOUS ) CHARACTER watches the monster killi her boyfriend.
Reaction:Escape
She runs screaming. She finds the remaining group hiding in the crematory, ready to fight off the monster.
Horror Situation:
The ( CARRIER ) charges the monster with a knife and stabs the monster, and allowing the others to escape.
Reaction:Escape
The others hesitantly run to another hiding place.
Horror Situation
The ( OUT OF CONTROL / OBNOXIOUS ) character and tells the rest the monster is dead and it’s safe to leave-but the monster is not dead, and he rises back up.
Reaction:Escape
( OUT OF CONTROL ) defiantly comes out of hiding-leaving the group. The monster sees and captures her, and puts her into the furnace. She screams hysterically until the screams fade away.
Horror Situation:
( the Moral one and the Rescuer) jump the monster and pin him to the conveyor belt. ( The Rescuer tells the Moral one ) to press the button and start the conveyor. As they struggle, Rescuer’s belt gets caught in the belt and the Monster and RESCUER go into the furnace.
Reaction:Solve
He stares at the furnace with regret, then gives a sigh of relief and regret.
Horror Situation:
A body rises from a slab, pulls a sheet off of itself, and slowly drags its’ leg walking to the ( Moral One ), whose back turned. and It grabs his shoulder. We hear the Monster laughing in the furnace, and says
… I T’S N O T O V E R !
Reaction:Denial
The remaining group members just look at each other.
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What I learned doing this assignment is: if you follow these basic steps for a horror plot you will be well on your way to a successful horror script.
Mark Hammond: Horror Plot
ACT 1 – – SET UP FOR HORROR
Atmosphere of evil established:
It is a rainy Halloween night. A group of thrill seeking young adults are egged on by one of the group to break into the funeral home for some fun.
Connect with the characters:
The group is outside of a gated funeral home. It is suggested that they get in out of the rain. ( CARRIER ) recommends the funeral home.
The characters are warned not to do it:
( The Moral One ) the Nerd… warned them that they would be breaking and entering. ( The Innocent One ) agrees and adds that they would be disturbing the dead.
Denial of horror:
Inside they see a room labeled keep out. (The Carrier) tells the group he’s never going beyond this point. (The Out of Control One) and the Rebel entice the leader to go forward.
Safety taken away:
Once the group enters that door, all of the doors in the funeral home automatically lock, and steel riot shutters cover the windows.
Monster — the nature of the beast:
They hear noise and screaming coming from another room.
ACT 2 — THE POINT OF NO RETURN
Isolated / Trapped / Abducted
Realizing that the doors are locked they hesitantly go towards the sound of the screen, hoping someone there can help them.
One of us killed:
The leader tells the group to stay put while he goes to investigate the screams. He never returns!
The monster is worse than we thought:
The group enters a room filled with caskets. One opens and their leader sits up with a large hole in his chest.
Terrorized:
They see the shadow of the monster on the wall coming towards them.
The monster is now after the intruders that are in his house.
ACT 3 FULL OUT HORROR
Fight to the death:
The rescuer tells everyone to form a circle pick up any kind of instrument they can find to fight off the monster.
Hysteria:
( OUT OF CONTROL / OBNOXIOUS ) and THE ( REBEL / RULE BREAKER ) disagree and run to find an escape.
They run into a room lock the door behind them only to find that the monster is in that room. ( The OUT OF CONTROL / OBNOXIOUS ) CHARACTER PUSHES HER BOYFRIEND INTO THE ARMS OF THE MONSTER, AND HE IS KILLED.
The thrilling escape from death:
( OUT OF CONTROL / OBNOXIOUS ) She finds the group.
( THE CARRIER ) and the remaining are hid in the crematory. Ready to fight off the monster. The ( CARRIER ) charges the monster with a knife stabbing the monster, and allowing the others an scape.
Death returns to take one more:
The ( OUT OF CONTROL / OBNOXIOUS ) character wants out, and tells the rest the monster is dead and it’s safe to leave.
When she comes out the monster kills her. ( in the crematory )
Resolution:
The 24 hours is up and the monster leaves. Only the (MORAL ONE AND THE RESCUER ) SURVIVE.
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What I learned doing this assignment is: the decisions needed to match your concept can also change your concept.
Mark Hammond: Characters for Horror
Concept:
After being pronounced dead and taken to the funeral home. A person has exactly 24 hours to either go to hell, heaven, or return to life-whether they are truly dead or not.
Group:
6 young adult thrill-seeking college students
The dying pattern of this group:
( A ) 6 to 8 characters together and kill them off one by one.
Give us an identity in a sentence of each character that makes up your group:
LEADER:
A sociable entertaining frat brother majoring in ancient African and Caribbean religions.
INNOCENT:
A deacon’s daughter that is dating the leader.
OUT OF CONTROL / OBNOXIOUS:
Daughter of well-to-do parents that are in law and law enforcement. She is dating the rebel.
REBEL / RULE BREAKER:
The drug supplier that was kicked out of school for breaking and entering and for possession of illegal substances. He wants to prove his worth to his college friends, and girlfriend.
MORAL ONE:
A nerd and social outcast because of his high intellect.
RESCUER:
An ROTC candidate that must step up to the plate and save his friends.
CARRIER:
Once worked as a chauffeur for the funeral home and unwittingly leads them into the embalming area.
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What I learned in doing this assignment: I learned how the conventions really help flesh out my thoughts for this Horror Concept.
Mark Hammond:Terrifying Monster
My Monster:
My Monster Is A Undertaker/Devil
Their Terror:
The monster rips the souls out of bodies, mutilates bodies with a surgeon’s saw and hacksaw,
drains their blood, breaks their bones to fit them in caskets… all while they are still alive!
Their Mystery:
Victims can see a silhouette of someone on an operating table, screaming while frantically struggling to get away.
Helpless to do anything. they wonder, who is this person doing this, and will they be next?
The fear provoking appearance:
The monster is wearing a full black rubber apron, black elbow high rubber gloves, a black surgical face mask, a plastic face shield, and a black surgeons cap. The only thing we can see of his face is his really blood shot eyes.
Their Rules:
The rules are simple. Your sole has 24 hours of life remaining after arriving in the funeral home.
You can either go to heaven, come back to life, or go to hell.
The monster must do anything and everything to prevent you from escaping alive or going to heave during that time period.
Their Mythology:
The monster only has a certain amount of time to reach his quota of souls to be
captured. If the quota is not met he will be demoted to a keeper of the fire.
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HI everyone, my name is Dr. Mark Hammond I have written two comedy scripts, and got one option that fell through. Out of this class I hope to master the horror genre. I didn’t watch horror movies until now, so I will be relying on you to help me get a handle on this genre. I guess I am what you call a Renaissance man. I have a background in advertising, a former Army chaplain, and a pastor of a church in California. I am also a Christian family counselor -please just call me Mark. I’m excited about working with this class.
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(Insidious) Horror Conventions
What I learned doing this assignment: normal boundaries can be torn down, and you can customize the norm for your script.
Title: INSIDIOUS
Concept:
A spirit can travel between the world of the living, and the world of the dead.
Terrorize the characters:
All of the characters are terrorized in this movie.
Isolation:
The movie takes place in one of two houses.
Death:
The fear of death is present in 3/4 of the movie
Monster/ Villain:
The monsters/ Villains are demonic spirits from the dark world.
High Tension:
The high tension starts when the mother sees a demon and convinces her husband that they should move to another house.
Departure from reality:
We are led by drawings, photographs, Ghostbusters and a psychic into the realm of the dark world.
Moral statement:
(Maybe it is… fight evil) I am not sure if it had a moral statement or not.
My Horror Concept
Concept:
After being pronounced dead, a person has exactly 24 hours to either go to hell, heaven, or return to life-whether they are truly dead or not.
Terrorize the characters:
The characters are terrorized by fear of being killed by the undertaker and sent to hell before they are truly dead.
Isolation:
The movie takes place in a funeral home.
Death:
Actual death is only possible after 24 hours.
Monster/villain:
The monster is the undertaker, one of Satan’s demons.
High Tension:
High tension starts when the undertaker discovers ACCIDENT VICTIMS who are not dead yet.
Depart from reality:
The departure from reality is the 24 hour grace period after death.
Moral statement:
Dopers must die.
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My name is Mark Hammond and I accept the terms of the Confidentiality Agreement.
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Hi Edward, thank you so much for your critique. You did an outstanding job laying out some things that I didn’t see. They will help me really bring this script together. Looking forward to working with you as we move forward.